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    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part II

    HELVETES GJENFØDELSE
    [Infernal Rebirth]

    Note: Part III marks the conclusion of this fanfiction and will be released within a week or so!!! ^.^

    Act XVII

    Surrender

    Part II

    [Setting: Castle large central room; Lulian’s location]

    Lulian: Almost everyone is here *snickers*

    Narrator: Facing the Bokor's direction; Lulian demands answers.

    Lulian: I want an update on my followers!

    Tiberiu: (In thought) His followers against my team *pant*

    Bokor: Yes master...the Ghoul has murdered Aurel..

    [Pureblood Follower VI’s Identity Revealed]

    [Side Character Insight:
    Aurel]

    Hair: Dark brown, short length
    Eyes: Dark green
    Weight: 149
    Height: 5‘6
    Ethnicity: Romanian
    Gender: Male
    Age: Mid 30-40 (Appearance wise)


    Tiberiu: (In thought) You did well Rahmah *pant*

    Narrator: Lulian slightly lowers his head in remembrance as he slowly sways his stake cane back and fourth.

    Bokor: The beast hybrid rendered little Dracul death and unconscious..

    [Pureblood Follower III’s Identity Revealed]

    [Side Character Insight: Dracul]

    Hair: Dark blonde, short-mid length
    Eyes: Dark pink
    Weight: 93 (originally 126)
    Height: 4‘5 (originally 5’9)
    Ethnicity: Romanian
    Gender: Male
    Age: Early to mid late 20 (When in adult form and also has an appearance of roughly age 10 when in changed form)


    Tiberiu: (In thought) Nothing less should be expected *pant*

    Narrator: Lulian's eyes widen as he tightens his grip strengthening the hold over Tiberiu with one hand and in the one he clutches his stake cane as his anger increased.

    Tiberiu: Uhhhhhaahh! *panting*

    Lulian: (In thought) My pet..

    Bokor: Valeriu and his opponent have killed each other..

    [Side Character Insight: Pureblood Follower I]

    [Side Character Insight: Valeriu]

    Hair: Dark blonde, short-mid length
    Eyes: Dark yellow
    Weight: 180
    Height: 5‘10
    Ethnicity: Romanian
    Gender: Male
    Age: Mid 30 (Appearance wise)


    Tiberiu: (In thought) *Panting* Attila..Neculai..which one!

    Narrator: Due to his elevated anger; Tiberiu is dealt even more sharp pain as the elder pureblood lowers his head and closes his eyes.

    Tiberiu: (Screams) Gggghhhhaaaa!!!!!

    Bokor: About Ruxandra...she has.....betra-

    [Side Character Insight: Pureblood Follower VI]

    [Side Character Insight: Ruxandra]

    Hair: Blondish-light brown, straight, lower back length
    Eyes: Dark gray
    Weight: 125
    Height: 5‘6
    Ethnicity: Romanian
    Gender: Female
    Age: Early 20 (Appearance wise)


    Lulian: (Screams) ANOTHER ONE!!!!!

    Lulian: (Shouts) You keep taking and taking away from me!!!

    Narrator: He blurted out as he raised his stake cane in Tiberiu’s location with a piercing glare.

    Lulian: You are to trail her and Dracul after obliterating the first betrayer!

    Bokor: Understood master..

    Narrator: Was swearingly stated as he continued his attack on the Ghoul.

    Rahmah: Kkyyyyaa...I can’t keep this up *panting*

    Narrator: Another phoenix stream of fire is summoned from behind as to block an incoming attack.

    Octavian: (In thought) My slashing attacks will not work!

    Narrator: Landing back onto the floor, he then virally shoots out his ultrasonic howling stream onto the Bokor who redirects the phoenix fire stream to block once again.

    Bokor: (In thought) I will no longer dirty my hands-

    Bokor: (Shouts) I call upon thy who lurks in the mountains and forests!

    Narrator: A black warp suddenly appears overhead as a figure enwrapped in wind floats downwards.

    Winded Figure: Who dares to call me?

    Bokor: You are now under my spell..attack that beast at once!

    Winded Figure: You will pay for this!

    Bokor: (In thought) A Tengu is the perfect adversary *snicker*

    [Insight: Tengu]

    Description: Is a demon having human and avian characteristics. They possess a magical hauchiwa (feathered fan) which it uses to stir up great winds.

    Origin: Japan

    Octavian: (In thought) The sorcerer is the source..

    Narrator: The figure’s body began to move not of its own free will as a result of the spell cast upon it.

    Octavian: (In thought) Its speed is on par to that of a pureblood if not better..

    Rahmah: (In thought) II...I cannnotttttt....barrr.e.iit..

    Narrator: Her body falls to the ground unresponsive.

    Bokor: (In thought) So his infection parasite worked..the late Aurel such a talented scientist *snicker*

    Bokor: (In thought) Your experiment on little Dracul also seems to have worked on that wolf-bat monstrosity *snickers*

    Octavian: (Shouts) NO!!!

    Narrator: As the bestial attempted to help his comrade; he was quickly intercepted by powerful winds that blasted him back.

    Tiberiu: Rahm..ah *pant*

    Lulian: I don’t know how I could’ve been involved with someone of half Norse decent!

    Lulian: (Shouting) I detest you!

    Lulian: Not even if you begged for your life in every way possible would it change my mind!

    Lulian: This game has finally come to pass...

    Narrator: With every remark; he slammed his stake cane at the floor rigorously each time. Acknowledging his end; Tiberiu begins to scream in horror as Lulian raises his arm; the hybrid vampire’s three appendages also rise and transform. The first black limb becomes a demonic wing, the second white limb becomes an angelic wing and the last crimson limb becomes a bloody wing.

    Bokor: (In thought) While these two rip each other to death..I will make my escape..

    Narrator: Octavian’s tattered body slams to the ground as the Tengu is absorbed back into the warp as the Bokor fades away into himself.

    Pureblood Follower IV: (Whispered tone) Ciprian look..the Bokor is gone

    [Side Character Insight: Pureblood Follower V]

    [Side Character Insight: Ciprian]

    Hair: Black, straight, shoulder length, bun
    Eyes: Bright white
    Weight: 148
    Height: 5‘10
    Ethnicity: Romanian
    Gender: Male
    Age: 30-40 (Appearance wise)


    Ciprian : Flaviu...are you suggesting we depart?

    [Side Character Insight: Pureblood Follower IV]

    [Side Character Insight: Flaviu]

    Hair: Blondish-light brown, straight, lower back length
    Eyes: Dark red
    Weight: 135
    Height: 5‘9
    Ethnicity: Romanian
    Gender: Male
    Age: Early to mid 20 (Appearance wise)


    Flaviu: Yes I am..

    Ciprian : So you are decided....

    Narrator: Fascinated by Tiberiu’s transformation, the elder pureblood ceased in attacking and had not notice that his remaining pureblood family and magical warrior who foresaw a terrible coming; all exited for their lives.

    Lulian: So this was the true awakening of your mutated powers?

    Narrator: Tiberiu’s entire body suddenly begins to turn a blue sapphire to black onyx color.

    Tiberiu: (Inner voice) It is time for us to have a proper confrontation..

    Narrator: The presence within the mutated vampire’s body was then felt by Lulian.

    Lulian: (In thought) What is this?

    [Inner Thought Conversation]

    Narrator: Reverting back into Tiberiu's mind, the voice begins to reveal its true intentions.

    Inner voice: dO YoU WaNT MOre powER tHaN yOu’VE EvER pOssESSeD?

    Tiberiu: ...Yes..

    Tiberiu: (Inner voice): I wIlL AlLoW YOu FUll Use oF MY poWeR-

    Tiberiu: (Inner voice): AlThoUgh ThErE ArE A fEW THiNGs wE muST DicUSS bEForE ThiS Is TO oCCuRr..

    Tiberiu: Lets start with who are you really?

    Narrator: He asks looking around, though sees nothing but only a vast dark open area.

    Inner Voice: YoU mAy noT liKe tHe aNsWErs..

    Narrator: Its voice being heard from behind Tiberiu as it began to materialize. He then turns around to confront the thing in which had helped him ever since setting out on his vengeful journey. A blurred bluish-black figure can be seen facing him as they both float just a feet away.

    Tiberiu: Tell me..

    Act XVII Part II End


    [ Monster Encyclopedia ]

    The text in bold is relevant to this Act:

    Origin: Vampires originate in central and eastern Europe.

    [Insight: Pureblood Vampire]

    Description: Is the result of one born from a genuine vampire mother and father. Pure blooded vampires are rare and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity.

    Appearance: Is one who has vampire ethnicity and is born into or owns great power and money. An aristocrat of sorts.

    [Insight: Turned Vampire]

    Description: Is the result of a human bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chooses to turn their victim thus is cursed and transforms sometime within the hour.

    Appearance: Will usually be a human who cannot fend for themselves. A tramp or an unfortunate victim in the wrong place.

    In Attila/Neculai’s case, after having their leader’s aura infused into themselves later on in an emotional state invokes them to awaken heightened abilities as a result to the absorbed aura surpassing a turned vampire thus making them unique. They both in the beginning lose control as the power-up overwhelms their willpower. However, once the initial awakening stage has occurred and passed will they be able to begin controlling their new powers.

    [Insight: Mutated Vampire]

    Description: This occurrence is unique and the result of Tiberiu’s soul not being able to normally pass on as due others who are turned.

    In Tiberiu's case, he was bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chose not to turn their victim thus at that time somehow a mutation occurred rather than death. The soul was imprisoned from continuing onto the afterlife and subdued into an enforced transformation. His form is unique as he died never turning into a vampire and was then forcefully given life again. He was re-birthed with vampire-like qualities. A mutated vampire has not been ranked due to this being the first of its kind.

    Appearance: In the requirement for more power; Tiberiu undergoes a slight mutation in terms of his body becoming enveloped by a sphere of his own aura and a limb-like appendage that grew on his upper back; blood red in color. The next occurrence results in a second blood red colored limb to have risen and the initial limb has changed into a black color though his aura seems to take a longer time to retract. The following time a third blood red colored limb rises while the previous limbs; the initial turning black and second retaining the blood red color and it has also taken an even longer time for his aura to retract. Tiberiu’s fourth invoke for more power enforces his three appendages to extend; the initial limb black, the second blood red and the final limb which changed into a white color. When the required power had been met it then withdraws.

    [Insight: Lycanthrope]

    Description: Is one who is bitten by another Lycanthrope during a full moon and thus cursed. After the next full moon and their official transformation, they can then transform at will on any given time of day.

    Appearance: It usually has a height of around 6'5 to 7‘0 weighing of about two hundred-fifty to three hundred pounds. A bulky body, silvery fur, long thick claws, large jaw, massive fangs, powerful mid to long length tail and huge hind legs in appearance. It's origin is Europe.

    [Insight: Hybrid Lycanthrope]

    Description: Is a Lycanthrope who consumes blood of a differing ethnic creature. In Octavian’s case; he drinks the blood of a mutated vampire thus his form is unique.

    Appearance: This pre-hybrid form invokes the Lycanthrope’s fur to malt, skin to turn a white color and the body becomes covered in opened cuts which is then stained red with the exposure to their blood.

    [Insight: Lythimpir]

    Description: Is a self named term Octavian gives himself and is unique to him as he transcended from that of a Lycanthrope by means of drinking the blood of a mutated vampire. It’s power differs by the vampire who offered his/her blood. This hybrid form is unique.

    Appearance: His hybrid form is completed as his hair takes on a raven color and grows out above his lower back, bat-like ears replace the lycanthrope ears, the lycanthrope snout retracts creating a more humanoid visage, irises slit in two colored silver and raven which overlap each other resembling an x. He gains vampire fangs. His body from head to toe becomes silver colored and is elongated. The waist down is covered in raven colored fur. Bat-like wings; raven in color protrude one from the right arm and left leg located on the right side of his wrist and from the back of his ankle that spread with a wingspan of about six feet. His tail thinned out and grew several feet in length. His healing capabilities, strength and stamina have heightened.

    [Insight: Mahr]

    Description: Is a female goblin which rides on people's chests while they sleep inducing nightmares while their weight causes the victim to have difficulty breathing. It’s origin is Germany.

    Appearance: Is a female spirit or goblin with a hideous visage. The goblin’s body is yellow-greenish in color, stout and when crawling on its victim which are usually female; will be in a sitting position on the chest area.

    [Insight: Dhampiresa]

    Description: Is a type of vampire hybrid who is birthed from a vampire father and human mother. Thus is half vampire half human and the male counterpart is named Dhampir. They will usually be carrying weapons and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity. It's origin is Balkan.

    Appearance: Her weapons are a crossbow with arrows made of silver and wooden stakes as well as a long pointed end sword made of silver; forged into a close appearance to that of a crucifix thus far have been revealed.

    [Insight: Hybrid Dhampiresa]

    Description: In Venera’s case, a Dhampiresa who consumed blood of a differing ethnic creature; a Lythimpir thus making this form unique.

    Appearance: Venera’s pre-hybrid form causes her irises to gain two extra slits on the bottom perpendicular to each other appearing as an upside down T; glowing orchid color. Her hybrid form completes as her hair grows out past her thighs, hands and fingers stretch five inches as her finger nails grow over three inches becoming claw-like, ankles elongate as her feet stretch out and toenails grow over five inches appearing claw-like as well, two slits join the single irises creating a reversed T glowing orchid in color. Strength and stamina are heightened.

    [Insight: Berserk DNA Hybrid Dhampiresa]

    Description: This occurred as a result of her weakened body not being able to stabilize the blood changes and thus her own blood combats the Lythimpir blood which invokes her DNA to alter her body. This form is unique to the Dhampir solely.

    Appearance: Her body then begins to float and convulses. Hair turning completely red-violet, veins protruding as well as amethyst colored slash wounds mark her entire body, the sclera becomes black in color as the irises and pupils turn indigo and her clothes become tethered. The altering seems to have affected her persona and abilities.

    [Insight: Zombie]

    Description: Is a corpse reanimated by a sorcerer through a spell. It’s origin is Haiti.

    Appearance: The corpse is no one in particular as the sorcerer simply will cast their spell over any grave sight. However, the sorcerer is sure to use a fresh corpse as it will be much more sustainable for the commands than a decomposed body. Although, the corpse will become greatly disfigured through the spell’s process.

    [Insight: Bokor]

    Description: Is a sorcerer who uses black and white magic to cast spells, curses or to create creatures. It’s origin is Haiti.

    [Insight: Ghoul]

    Description: Is a desert dwelling jinn possessing the ability to change its form into any animal or human. Their true form is that of a spirit. It’s origin is Arabia.

    Appearance: Golden colored mist appearing in the form of a footless demon. Every Ghoul’s true form varies.

    [Insight: Wyvern]

    Description: Is a legendary two winged, two legged, single tailed creature. It’s origin is Great Britain.

    Appearance: It’s body is ruby red in color, completely covered in spikes, having no arms and a barbed tail.

    [Insight: Lindworm]

    Description: Is a legendary wingless creature with a long body, bipedal and single tail with a venomous bite. It’s origin is Germany.

    Appearance: It’s body has a emerald green color, lengthy serpentine body and has parts of its body intertwined.

    [Insight: Guivre]

    Description: Is a legendary creature with a long body and horned head who spreads plagues through its breath. It’s origin is France.

    Appearance: It’s body has a sapphire blue color, long serpentine body, the single tail splits in two at the end and has five horns on the head; it’s forehead containing largest two.

    [Insight: Golem]

    Description: Is a mythical construct created to serve its creator; either a greatly empowered sorcerer or wizard. It is constructed from inanimate matter consisting usually of rock or mud; resembling a humanoid. This construct has no mind, soul and cannot speak. It’s origin is Jewish.

    Appearance: It is constructed from inanimate matter consisting usually of rock or mud thus the body will have a brownish color of sorts; resembling a humanoid. It has no mind, soul and cannot speak.

    [Insight: Căpcăun]

    Description: This is a type of ogre having the head of a dog and body of a man. It is muscular and usually carries a club of sorts. Although, sometimes it can have two heads.

    Appearance: A cruel and bloodthirsty creature this is. They can range from giant to dwarf size and are strong. Their bodies’ colors vary but are usually in the brownish area. The head resembles that of a dog and the body are humanoid appearing like a muscular man.[Insight:

    [Insight: Tengu]

    † Description: Is a demon having human and avian characteristics. They possess a magical hauchiwa (feathered fan) which it uses to stir up great winds.

    † Appearance: It is a large aerial humanoid with a red face and or a beak or long nose.


    --> Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act I: Secret
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act II: Betrayal
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act III: Revenge
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act IV: Crisis
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act V: Chance
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VI: Strife
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VII: Pressure
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VIII: Change
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act IX: Patience
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act X: Heartbeat
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XI: Hidden
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XII: Torment
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XIII: Deviate
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XIV: Torture
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XV: Cringe
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVI: Cruel
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part I
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III
     
         
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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part II

    To be frank, I don't know what to say... I was looking forward to a great fight, blowing up stars, black holes dooming all of humanity and whatnot. Haha, lol, I'm just joking, loved it So, Tiberui's true nature unfolds before Lulian, we have yet to see what both are truly capable of As for Atilla, Neculai, Octavian, Venera and Rahmah's fates I see you did not (yet) decide to keep all of them alive, which adds a touch of realism to your fanfiction. So, 1 week you say for the next chapter, eh? I'll just have to wait then for the last part to see what you truly planned
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part II

    Way better than i expected.
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part II

    Quote Originally Posted by danivass View Post
    To be frank, I don't know what to say... I was looking forward to a great fight, blowing up stars, black holes dooming all of humanity and whatnot. Haha, lol, I'm just joking, loved it :p So, Tiberui's true nature unfolds before Lulian, we have yet to see what both are truly capable of :) As for Atilla, Neculai, Octavian, Venera and Rahmah's fates I see you did not (yet) decide to keep all of them alive, which adds a touch of realism to your fanfiction. So, 1 week you say for the next chapter, eh? I'll just have to wait then for the last part to see what you truly planned :)
    You had me-I thought in the beginning that you really were turned off with everything that happened in this act but I gave out a big sigh of relief when I got through a couple of sentences XD I almost had a heart attack as it seemed that the whole thing would have amounted to a disaster lol Thankfully you were yanking my chain ^.^ Yes, I wanted to get away from the most clichés I could lol It seems that I've succeeded! :) I know one last week to go and this fanfic will conclude once and for all!!! Thanks for your opinion as it was better than I could have imagined lol ;)

    Quote Originally Posted by naruto kyuubi View Post
    Way better than i expected.
    Thank you ;)
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part II

    So, after this chapter, one thing is sure - the previous chapter was indeed a build-up to something extraordiary. And man, this chapter was uber-extraordinary. So many things depicted. So many new interesting parts leading to an epic finale and such great writing. I'm in awe.

    You gave the pureblood names which was a very good move. It gave them a more humane touch.

    Lulian's emotions were brilliant. There was confidence, charisma, deviousness and even anger in his words. Fantastic depiction. The emotional declaration, as I said, may have disappointed me in the last chapter but the way, he delivered his story with such a laid-back evil attitude was awesome. It made the same whole thing back in flow.

    The entry of Octavian was very well-done too and the Bokor was really interesting with his schemes and power display. From the ending I suppose, we won’t see much from him in the last chapter though but I must say, he was a very well-written character and more credit to you to present him in such a strong way given that he was introduced pretty late.

    The action and moments culminating into Tiberiu unleashing his power were executed to perfection. Smooth yet enthralling road leading to the last chapter. I must say that I’m really curious about the inner voice and powers of Tiberius. If you asked me chapters ago, I will have thought that you will have unveil the secrets of Lulian in the final chapter and then proceed to the ultimate fight but instead, it seems that you are choosing to unveil more on Tiberiu. I like it because it gets more attention towards the main character especially since Lulian's troops have dominated so much that Tiberiu got an underdog position.

    Moving forward towards the next chapter now to witness the ultimate chapter. As for this Act, simply take all praises for this absolutely brilliant act.
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part II

    Quote Originally Posted by Escorpiius View Post
    So, after this chapter, one thing is sure - the previous chapter was indeed a build-up to something extraordiary. And man, this chapter was uber-extraordinary. So many things depicted. So many new interesting parts leading to an epic finale and such great writing. I'm in awe.

    You gave the pureblood names which was a very good move. It gave them a more humane touch.

    Lulian's emotions were brilliant. There was confidence, charisma, deviousness and even anger in his words. Fantastic depiction. The emotional declaration, as I said, may have disappointed me in the last chapter but the way, he delivered his story with such a laid-back evil attitude was awesome. It made the same whole thing back in flow.

    The entry of Octavian was very well-done too and the Bokor was really interesting with his schemes and power display. From the ending I suppose, we won’t see much from him in the last chapter though but I must say, he was a very well-written character and more credit to you to present him in such a strong way given that he was introduced pretty late.

    The action and moments culminating into Tiberiu unleashing his power were executed to perfection. Smooth yet enthralling road leading to the last chapter. I must say that I’m really curious about the inner voice and powers of Tiberius. If you asked me chapters ago, I will have thought that you will have unveil the secrets of Lulian in the final chapter and then proceed to the ultimate fight but instead, it seems that you are choosing to unveil more on Tiberiu. I like it because it gets more attention towards the main character especially since Lulian's troops have dominated so much that Tiberiu got an underdog position.

    Moving forward towards the next chapter now to witness the ultimate chapter. As for this Act, simply take all praises for this absolutely brilliant act.
    I'm pleased that even though in your opinion I didn't succeed in terms of a mind-blowing factor in the last chapter but I did so in this one! ^.^ I decided to give the purebloods names especially since they were only briefly in the being and afterwards they get the spotlight on the final mini arc thus I wanted to represent some sort of character development no matter how miniscule it was.

    Thank God you accepted Lulian's unravelment ^.^ I was thrilled to hear that I pulled off his personality in the end. I wanted to give Octavian character depth and I'm glad that I accomplished that. Yes like I stated earlier the Bokor came more into focus due to the readers-you being one of them I also drew some inspiration for his character from a character in the Bihoujo Senshi Sailor Moon manga named Wiseman.

    I went through many alternate endings and it had many transitions until I decided on the finished product and I was very happy with it. The alternatives were very much lacking in character, setting, etc. detail/development thus I really had to strive to mend the bland disaster lol Tiberiu's character did in fact receive less spotlight in many aspects though I had to make sure that he was redeemed in the end Thank you for your compliments my friend!
     
         

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    Hearing that his most powerful subordinates had either been defeated or defected from his group brings such a huge smile to my face; Lulian is finally starting to appear on the losing end, and with Tiberiu's sudden surge in power, I'm almost certain things are over for him. Awesome work.
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part II

    Quote Originally Posted by Sasuk3Uchiha View Post
    Hearing that his most powerful subordinates had either been defeated or defected from his group brings such a huge smile to my face; Lulian is finally starting to appear on the losing end, and with Tiberiu's sudden surge in power, I'm almost certain things are over for him. Awesome work.
    lol at your amusement to the news about Lulian's purebloods-I love it! ^.^ Tiberiu finally began to receive his biggest power-up in a while. However, not everything is always as straightforward :D I also like your enthusiasm and opinion my friend
     
         

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