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    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

    HELVETES GJENFØDELSE
    [Infernal Rebirth]

    Note: I want to first thank everyone who have read up until the very end. Secondly, if this fanfiction received miniscule views; I most likely would have ceased continuation but I'm very thankful that did not come to pass ^.^ I suppose the final thing to say is that I hope the ending I chose will be at the very least acceptable and I apologize for the slight late release as I've recently been having computer problems -_- Long story short it should be fixed by the end of this week and thankfully I am able to post this now so for once enjoy this very long read lol ;)

    Act XVII

    Surrender

    Part III

    [Setting: Castle large central room; Lulian’s location]

    [Inner Thought Conversation Continuation]

    Inner Voice: YOu HaVe bEeN muTatINg eVEr sInCe THat tiMe oF LosS-

    Inner Voice: i WaS CrEAteD frOm tHE HATe thAt aWoKE thrOUgH yOUr deSiRe fOr reVenGE

    Inner Voice: I aM tHe mAniFEstaToN oF yOUr bRotHEr aNd lOvER In A sInGLe bOdy anD-

    Inner Voice: ThE VesSel wHo BeArs halF Of yoUr pOWer

    Narrator: In their second encounter, the voice finally reveals itself to contain characteristics of Horatiu and Lavina and consists of his blue-black aura.

    Inner Voice: I cAll mYselF AMANTBROR..

    Tiberiu: Their name is lover and brother in Romanian and Norwegian-

    Tiberiu: I was in such pain that I actually through my mutation recreated you two in one and..

    Tiberiu: ...You look like them..

    AmantBror: DuE tO HoRaTiU aNd LaViNa's pUriTy thE thReE wINgS WEre CreATed aS A rEpReSenTatiON oF-

    AmantBror: eVil bLacK, aNgeL WhiTe anD sIn Red wHich ALl Are faCtorS wiTHin yoURseLf-

    AmantBror: ThiS wAs doNe foR YOu To bEAr tHe buRdeN oF VenGeaNCe..

    Tiberiu: But I've been doing all of this for them-

    AmantBror: AnD yET tHeY WouLd raThER haVe yOu Not RIsk yoUR LIfe foR juSTicE

    AmantBror: HoWeVEr...I aM a pARt of You anD If yOu wiSh To coNtiNUe I wIll Help yoU..

    Tiberiu: This is not only for them but for the innocent lives yet to be taken by him therefore I must pursue this to the end!

    AmantBror: tHEn I HAve oNe moRe thINg tO iNfoRm yoU wItH-

    AmantBror: Now LIsteN caRefuLlY..yoU'Ve aLreAdy USed youR eXtRa lIFe wHeN You wEre muTATed aNd reBirtHed bAcK iNto thIs woRLd-

    AmantBror: tHuS yOU MusT fIGHt To WIn..

    Tiberiu: (In thought) I must warn Necul-

    AmantBror: DoN't Even tHiNK aBOut iT-

    Tiberiu: You can-

    AmantBror: I aM fOrVeR INtERtwINeD wIThIN youR minD..

    AmantBror: ThiS coNveRsaTiON iS wItHIn An iNteRvAl oF oNe sEcoNd thEREfoRe-

    AmantBror: back in reality YoU muStn'T WaiSt tHe neXT SEconD wArDing YOuR AllIes of tHis As hE mAy gAiN tHe uPPer HAnd..

    AmantBror: oNcE I sHaRE tHIs poWEr wITh yoU..We WIll merge inTO oNe EnITy-

    AmantBror: aN EvoLVed VAmpiRE..

    Tiberiu: But why are you doing this?

    AmantBror: AlOnG WItH ThEIr ChArACTeriSTIcs i GAiNeD THeIR aSPectS Of tHEir KInD HeARt..

    Narrator: A feeling of tranquility had finally reached Tiberiu after what seemed a lifetime of sorrow as he lowered his head with a slight smile forming.

    Tiberiu: I see

    Narrator: Suddenly the AmantBror’s black aura dissipates into Tiberiu’s direction; fusing with him.

    [Inner Thought Conversation Ends]

    Narrator: His hair length grows breaking the band that bound it stretching to his feet colored dark blue with white uneven streaks in different sizes and various directions. His ears grow a couple of inches pointing out. His skin turns a dark blue and white colored fur about half an inch long begins to grow in various places. His sclera turns dark blue and his iris and pupil turns white. Dark blue Sabre-like fangs protrude out of his mouth. His hands transforms into two white colored elongated claws and the thumb sharpens out. His toes as well change into two white elongated claws. Aura shines from his body colored dark blue and losing the black color now white.

    Lulian: (In thought) It seems his mutation evolved...

    [Insight: Evolved Vampire]

    Description: In Tiberiu's case, his mutation had reached its end completing the final stage. This form is unique.

    Neculai: (In thought) What have you become leader..

    Narrator: A stunned Neculai having arrived shortly stood at the entrance viewing his beaten comrades and leader engage in his long awaited battle.

    Neculai: (In thought) I've got to help them all..

    Tiberiu: (Shouts) I will avenge those of who you took away!

    Narrator: Tiberiu releases an intense dark blue colored aura that engulfs his own body which then nullifies Lulian’s aura restraints as he becomes afloat.

    Lulian: (High crazed tone) NO!!!!!

    Narrator: From applying so much pressure onto the floor by his stake cane the refined sharp tip grew duller due to Lulian’s astonishment. Dark blue aura then proceeds to unleash from Tiberiu’s body as it is blown in the elder pureblood’s direction like a blast of wind.

    Lulian: (In thought) I am matchless!

    Narrator: Lulian’s aura grew more and more menacing changing into a fierce pitch-black color that ruptured throughout his body creating pillars that form one after the other each banded together in which surrounded him as he protected himself.

    Lulian: (Shouting) I will never die!

    Narrator: Lulian’s body suddenly bursts. A smokescreen enfolds as an image gradually is revealed.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) What is that-

    Narrator: As the smoke clears, what is to be viewed were two large wings both folded; on one side a ruby red dragon wing; on the other a black bat wing with a wing span of around ten feet or so. A tail extends out of his lower back reaching about five feet. Three sapphire blue horns protrude on his forehead and a row from the back of his neck to the tip of his tail. Arms and legs become reptilian-like with claws that extend several feet in length. His skin turns black and his face becomes covered in emerald green scales that run throughout his body as his clothing tore off. This came to be as an ordered Bokor infused blood from the three dragons who fought Tiberiu’s group within his own as a security of sorts.

    Lulian: (Shouts) I AM A PUREBLOOD HYBRID!!!!!

    [Insight: Hybrid Pureblood Vampire]

    Description: Is a pureblood who either consumes, injects, etc. blood from a differing ethnic creature. In Lulian's case; he is infused by the three legendary dragon's blood.

    Lulian: (Crazed Screaming) EAT THIS!!!

    Narrator: Numerous pillars of pitch-black aura surface from the ground in the mutated vampire’s direction at a rapid state. A wall of dark blue aura is then risen before Tiberiu in an attempt to counteract the pillars. However, the onslaught overpowers the aura wall as he is then bombarded. This fierce dragon and bat cross breed form proved absolute.

    Tiberiu: (Screams) Ghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhaaaaa!!!

    Neculai: (Shouting) Leader!

    Narrator: He cried having briefly released a passed out Venera of her restraints.

    Neculai: (In thought) I've got to do something..

    Narrator: The ghoul had previously regained consciousness and bided her time for the chance where she knew she could be of use.

    Rahmah: (In thought) *Panting* He cannot do this alone-

    Narrator: She thought as she had began to painstakingly drift in a scattered manner near his area taking the form of sand.

    Neculai: (In thought) What is Rahmah thinking?

    Rahmah: (In thought) I will give.*pant*..you my life’s..*pant*...essence..

    Rahmah: (In thought) *Panting* My life is close to ending anyways and this is the least I could do for your attempt to set me free..

    Rahmah: (In thought) *Panting* That pureblood held as much anguish for me just as much as I held for them all...and was able to acquire revenge for his master but so did I..

    Rahmah: Nice form boss but it seems he is still too much..

    Narrator: Having resolved her will, she then closed her eyes and became a gold dust that scattered over Tiberiu’s suffering body and quickly poured onto him.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) ...Ttthhhhis..feeelllinng-

    Tiberiu: (In thought) Tttthiss..ffeeling rreminddss me.....oof Rahmahh..

    Narrator: His body absorbs her gift; empowering him as gold colored dust-like particles bgean to omit from his body.

    Neculai: (In thought) It appears she replenished his power and body...Rahmah..I'm-

    Narrator: Her sacrifice seemed to have opened up the reckless vampire 's eyes to his cruel feelings towards her in the past now troubled him as he moved onto Octavian to see his condition.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) ...I’ve been entrusted with her will therefore I cannot let it be in vain..

    Narrator: Lulian suddenly appears before the mutated vampire instantaneously due to the increased speed via his wings as he then directs his aura weapon towards Tiberiu’s neck and his cane in the other hand; at Tiberiu’s upper chest whilst his pillar attack continued.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) Thank you Rahmah..

    Narrator: The lacerated mutated vampire’s two wings are then directed at the elder vampire by firstly penetrating the aura pillars to then striking his chest area whilst the third wing began to flap forcing them both downwards as they impact the floor below.

    Lulian: Gha!

    Narrator: As a result, the aura pillar attack ceases and Tiberiu backs away in mid air as his triple wings swayed back and fourth.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) His power is immense..

    Neculai: (In thought) Now is my chance!

    Narrator: As Lulian began to stand up he sees various parts of his body being enwrapped by sharp objects in different sizes as he rapidly stretched out his wings to flapping them over his entire self which began to cancel out the attack. He then unleashed powerful broiling winds onto Neculai who is swallowed up by the scorching cyclone as it abruptly surges upwards into a spiraling pillar incinerating him.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) Neculai!

    Narrator: Blood is drawn and Tiberiu’s weapon is summoned as his aura overtakes the blood and forms the scythe. An intense dark brown light can be seen within the sweltering pillar. His charred body possessing his weapon around him subsequently shoots out onto the floor smoking.

    Tiberiu: (Shouts) Ne-

    Lulian: (Crazed Scream) Submit yourself to me!

    Narrator: He then appears before Tiberiu once again in the blink of an eye but he quickly ricochets his scythe with the incoming stake cane then forcing the elder pureblood back several feet with his weapon.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) I must destroy his cane first..

    Narrator: A second scythe extends from the end of the first with the tip in reverse becoming a double-edged scythe.

    Lulian: Pathetic!

    Lulian: (Shouts) I've transcended and I have no need for this any longer!!

    Narrator: He proudly replied as he released his weapon which then dissipated and was absorbed back into his body.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) He feels invincible..

    Narrator: At his disgust, the mutated vampire launches his weapon in a rapid motion aimed at the elder pureblood.

    Lulian: Hmm..

    Narrator: He easily avoids it but realizes the perceptive mechanism behind it.

    Lulian: (In thought) It is controlled..

    Narrator: Acknowledging his intent, Lulian begins to take flight as he maneuvered himself around the sharp seeking object and his wings smash into the sides of the great room as the castle's barrier was dispelled by his former magical warrior.

    Lulian: (In thought) Damn you Bokor..

    Narrator: He then lands onto the floor and awaits the weapon's arrival as he planned to destroy it with his wing but as it reached him it paused and motioned upwards then dove around one of his wings slicing it off.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) ...He regenerates!

    Narrator: The severed wing began to disintegrate as a another dragon wing began to extend out of the wound.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) Is a stake still fatal?

    Narrator: Suddenly, he instantaneously appears before Lulian and imprisons them both in a chamber of his dark blue aura which possessed a substance like that of water that slowed the elder pureblood’s movements.

    Lulian: (In thought) He is compressing my body..what an ability..

    Narrator: Tiberiu then began to submerge out of the chamber.

    Lulian: (Shouting) I won’t let you!

    Narrator: Pitch-black aura proceeds to confine part of the fleeting Tiberiu’s body which enabled his weapons to impale him. Though, his attacks miss the vital points intended due to the space around them.

    Lulian: (Screams) IMPOSSIBLE!!!

    Narrator: Lulian’s body was now entrapped in the chamber as Tiberiu finally escapes as he falls onto the floor with blood splattering everywhere from his severe wounds to the neck and chest.

    Tiberiu: Now!

    Narrator: Raising an arm; the mutated vampire quickly clenched his hand into a fist invoking the boxed-like prison to rapidly shrink in size in an effort to crush his target.

    Lulian: (In thought) I shall overturn this!

    Narrator: A perplexed Lulian then unleashes the rest of his aura as it turns the lustrous deep blue chamber dark. Gradually a hole is forced open and a pitch-black smog can be seen attempting to seep throughout it before the confinement closes in on the elder pureblood.

    Tiberiu: I..II.I avenged you bo-

    Narrator: The trap did not succeed however as a small portion of his aura was able to escape just as the technique completed. He then reformed a small distance behind Tiberiu as his wings began to quickly create a fierce vortex in order to draw in the mutated vampire. Although, he stabs his double-edged scythe into the floor to avoid being swept away as he contemplated.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) I have to overcome him

    Narrator: The dominant current was too much for him as he could no longer hold on. As he was being pulled in he used his wings to counteract but no avail. Thundering noises began to fill the enormous room as ultrasonic waves intertwined with a gust of wind aimed for Lulian .

    Tiberiu: (In thought) Octavian!

    Octavian: (In thought) Somehow master's blood helped combat against that pureblood kid's infected slash-

    Octavian: (In thought) I am grateful to my abilities as I can help in the extraction of revenge for my clan..

    Narrator: Having regained his strength at a gradual rate due to his healing capabilities which began to heighten even more at some point after the end of his battle with the pureblood; enabled him to help out his leader.

    Tiberiu: (In thought) Thank you my friend..

    Lulian: (Screaming) THIS HORIBLE SOUND!!!

    Lulian: (Crazed Scream) ITS YOU!-

    Lulian: (Crazed Scream) OUT FOR REVENGE AS WELL!

    Octavian: (Screams) You will pay for all your sins!

    Narrator: Due to focusing on drawing Tiberiu in, he could not avoid Octavian's attack as he fell to his knees, his ears began to bleed and as a result his precision somewhat lost focus.

    Lulian: (Screaming) GHHAAAAAA!!!!!

    Narrator: Tiberiu takes the small opening to launch his double-edged scythe at Lulian but was deflected by the lunatic pureblood's resisting scales on his arm.

    Lulian: (Shouting) Nothing will stop me!!!

    Narrator: Upon noticing the scale's purpose; Neculai quickly devised a plan by directing fifty minimized spike-like spears which materialize around the elder pureblood's right wrist severing it. However, the intent to catch him off guard lies in failure as in the next instance; Tiberiu's shoulders are impaled by Lulian's massive wings and is quickly pulled into the cane which pierces then his heart.

    Octavian: (Shouts) MASTER!

    Neculai: (Shouts) Leader! *panting*

    Narrator: The continuous attack by Octavian and Neculai's intervening scheme still could not stop Lulian from his goal of murdering Tiberiu.

    Lulian: (Crazed Scream) WHAT!-

    Narrator: Unbeknownst to Lulian, Tiberiu had pierced him in the heart as well though it was not felt by the elder pureblood in that instant due to his elevated adrenaline and ever growing lunacy with the stake he had attached to his leg which was possible because of his comrade's help. Both had penetrated their hearts simultaneously.

    Tiberiu: I could not leave this Earth without at least taken you down with me!

    Octavian: (In thought) My clansmen can now be in peace..

    Lulian: I..

    Narrator: Exerting the last of his strength the elder pureblood recited a parting message to the one person he grew to love and hate with all his heart.

    Lulian: (Crazed Scream) I WILL DIE HERE BUT I CURSE YOUR SOUL AND WILL ALWAYS BE THERE TO FOREVER HARROW YOU!!!!!

    Narrator: In a matter of seconds, Lulian’s screams of agony are swallowed up along with his body as the most powerful pureblood ceases to exist.

    Neculai: (In thought) ...Move..move..

    Narrator: As the shocked and pained vampire struggled to come to terms with the situation, a recovering Octavian watched on helplessly and Venera remaining unconscious.

    Tiberiu: *Panting* Thank you all...for everything..

    Neculai: (Frantic tone) *Panting* Leader!

    Tiberiu: *Panting* You and Attila can rebirth only once so use it wisely..

    Neculai: I've already used-

    Tiberiu: *Pant* I see..well take care of yourself *pant*

    Tiberiu: (In thought) It was not how I thought it would be but nevertheless we’ve attained vengeance...Octavian..

    Tiberiu: (In thought) I have even fallen in love twice in my life.....Venera..

    Tiberiu: (In thought) Mother..father...forgive me for running away and Horatiu’s involvement..I only wish that I could reunite with him and Lavina...

    Narrator: The Dhampiresa gradually opens her eyes to see the one she unexpectedly grew to hold dear’s existence vanish having a sorrowful visage.

    Venera: Nnn..oo!

    Narrator: Tears that could no longer be held back commenced to stream down her face.

    Neculai: (In thought) It appears as though my leader willed himself to continue living up until he spoke all he had to-

    Narrator: The wild vampire who underwent a change of heart quickly headed towards Venera and supported her up.

    Octavian: (Low tone) Master..

    Narrator: Soon after Attila makes his way to everyone after his rebirth for the first time.

    Attila: (Frantic tone) Master!

    Narrator: He was then informed of their leader’s demise as well as the one time rebirth usage.

    Attila: (In thought) I wasn't there when master needed from us most-

    Narrator: The older vampire was patted on the back by his old friend as he comforted him by what Tiberiu's words of compassion.

    Neculai: He thanked us all for our help though..

    Attila: (In thought) All of us have changed in some way because of him..

    Narrator: They all remained in silence remembering their leader and the Ghoul who fastened her death in return to strengthen Tiberiu.

    Neculai: ...I..I..have fallen in love with my opponent and she awaits me in the room we fought!

    Narrator: Everyone’s eyes suddenly turn to the wild vampire in surprise.

    Ruxandra: *Blushing* ...Ne..Neculai..

    Narrator: She stuttered as she gradually walked into the great room.

    Neculai: I thought I told you-

    Ruxandra: I couldn't any longer..I had to know of your fate!

    Neculai: I see-

    Neculai: Everyone this is...what is your name?

    Ruxandra: ..Ruxandra

    Venera: You! I will keep a close eye on you and if you're lying then-

    Ruxandra: I'm sorry for what mas- my former master has done to you all..

    Ruxandra: I was in love with him and I don't understand how but I began to have feelings for the enemy-

    Ruxandra: Since he never returned those feelings I decided to leave his side and start a new with Neculai..

    Venera: Maybe you can help us with locating the remaining purebloods and the magical being-

    Ruxandra: The Bokor..he was so mysterious but I will do everything I can to help..

    Octavian: That reminds me..the pureblood I fought with may still be alive..

    Venera: We will check on Octavian's opponent, rest and I want to hunt for an arm..

    Venera: I am a demon hunter after all and so my job is not finished

    Venera: (In thought) I will strive to control my unstable form and continue onwards!

    Narrator: Everyone looked up to her with encouragement and as their next leader.

    Octavian: I must decline on joining you as I have to accomplish another goal of mine but afterwards I’ll join you all again..

    Venera: I look forward to your cooperation in the future..

    Octavian: Yes master..

    Venera: (In thought) Tiberiu..I never even got to name my form and tell you...I was also to proud to confess to you-

    Venera: (In thought) Which I will always regret...but I hope you know that you were loved and in your heart...especially by me..


    HELVETES GJENFØDELSE
    [Infernal Rebirth]
    END

    [ Monster Encyclopedia ]

    The text in bold is relevant to this Act:

    Origin: Vampires originate in central and eastern Europe.

    [Insight: Pureblood Vampire]

    Description: Is the result of one born from a genuine vampire mother and father. Pure blooded vampires are rare and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity.

    Appearance: Is one who has vampire ethnicity and is born into or owns great power and money. An aristocrat of sorts.

    [Insight: Hybrid Pureblood Vampire]

    † Description: Is a pureblood who either consumes, injects, etc. blood from a differing ethnic creature. In Lulian's case; he is infused by the three legendary dragon's blood.

    † Appearance: Two large wings protrude from his upper back; one a ruby red dragon wing and the other a black bat wing both having a wing span of around ten feet or so. A tail extends out of his lower back reaching about five feet. Three sapphire blue horns protrude on his forehead and a row from the back of his neck to the tip of his tail. Arms and legs become reptilian-like with claws that extend several feet in length. His skin turns black and his face becomes covered in emerald green scales that run throughout his body. This hybrid form thus far is unique.


    [Insight: Turned Vampire]

    Description: Is the result of a human bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chooses to turn their victim thus is cursed and transforms sometime within the hour.

    Appearance: Will usually be a human who cannot fend for themselves. A tramp or an unfortunate victim in the wrong place.

    In Attila/Neculai’s case, after having their leader’s aura infused into themselves later on in an emotional state invokes them to awaken heightened abilities as a result to the absorbed aura surpassing a turned vampire thus making them unique. They both in the beginning lose control as the power-up overwhelms their willpower. However, once the initial awakening stage has occurred and passed will they be able to begin controlling their new powers.

    [Insight: Mutated Vampire]

    Description: This is profoundly rare as it can be a result of either a vampire drinking blood of another creature race or being exposed to some unnatural occurrence.

    In Tiberiu’s case, he was bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chose not to turn their victim thus at that time somehow a mutation occurred rather than death. The soul was imprisoned from continuing onto the afterlife and subdued into an enforced transformation. His form is unique as he died never turning into a vampire and was then forcefully given life again. He was re-birthed with vampire-like qualities. A mutated vampire has not been ranked due to this being the first of its kind.

    Appearance: In the requirement for more power, Tiberiu undergoes a slight mutation in terms of his body becoming enveloped by a sphere of his own aura and a limb-like appendage that grew on his upper back; blood red in color. The next occurrence results in a second blood red colored limb to have risen and the initial limb has changed into a black color though his aura seems to take a longer time to retract. The following time a third blood red colored limb rises while the previous limbs; the initial turning black and second retaining the blood red color and it has also taken an even longer time for his aura to retract. Tiberiu’s fourth invoke for more power enforces his three appendages to extend; the initial limb black, the second blood red and the final limb which changed into a white color. When the required power had been met it then withdraws.

    [[Insight: Evolved Vampire]

    † Description: In Tiberiu's case, his mutation had reached its end completing the final stage. This form is unique.

    † Appearance: His hair length grows breaking the band that bound it stretching to his feet colored dark blue with white uneven streaks in different sizes and various directions. His ears grow a couple of inches pointing out. His skin turns a dark blue and white colored fur about half an inch long begins to grow in various places. His sclera turns dark blue and his iris and pupil turns white. Dark blue Sabre-like fangs protrude out of his mouth. His hands transforms into two white colored elongated claws and the thumb sharpens out. His toes as well change into two white elongated claws. Aura shines from his body colored dark blue and losing the black color now white.


    [Insight: Lycanthrope]

    Description: Is one who is bitten by another Lycanthrope during a full moon and thus cursed. After the next full moon and their official transformation, they can then transform at will on any given time of day.

    Appearance: It usually has a height of around 6'5 to 7‘0 weighing of about two hundred-fifty to three hundred pounds. A bulky body, silvery fur, long thick claws, large jaw, massive fangs, powerful mid to long length tail and huge hind legs in appearance. It's origin is Europe.

    [Insight: Hybrid Lycanthrope]

    Description: Is a Lycanthrope who consumes blood of a differing ethnic creature. In Octavian’s case; he drinks the blood of a mutated vampire thus his form is unique.

    Appearance: This pre-hybrid form invokes the Lycanthrope’s fur to malt, skin to turn a white color and the body becomes covered in opened cuts which is then stained red with the exposure to their blood.

    [Insight: Lythimpir]

    Description: Is a self named term Octavian gives himself and is one who transcends that of a Lycanthrope by means of drinking the blood of a vampire. It’s power differs by the vampire who offered his/her blood. This hybrid form is unique.

    Appearance: His hybrid form is completed as his hair takes on a raven color and grows out above his lower back, bat-like ears replace the lycanthrope ears, the lycanthrope snout retracts creating a more humanoid visage, irises slit in two colored silver and raven which overlap each other resembling an x. He gains vampire fangs. His body from head to toe becomes silver colored and is elongated. The waist down is covered in raven colored fur. Bat-like wings; raven in color protrude one from the right arm and left leg located on the right side of his wrist and from the back of his ankle that spread with a wingspan of about six feet. His tail thinned out and grew several feet in length. His healing capabilities, strength and stamina have heightened.

    [Insight: Mahr]

    Description: Is a female goblin which rides on people's chests while they sleep inducing nightmares while their weight causes the victim to have difficulty breathing. It’s origin is Germany.

    Appearance: Is a female spirit or goblin with a hideous visage. The goblin’s body is yellow-greenish in color, stout and when crawling on its victim which are usually female; will be in a sitting position on the chest area.

    [Insight: Dhampiresa]

    Description: Is a type of vampire hybrid who is birthed from a vampire father and human mother. Thus is half vampire half human. They will usually be carrying weapons and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity. It’s origin is Balkan.

    Appearance: Her weapons are a crossbow with arrows made of silver and wooden stakes as well as a long pointed end sword made of silver; forged into a close appearance to that of a crucifix thus far have been revealed.

    [Insight: Hybrid Dhampiresa]

    Description: Is a Dhampiresa who consumes blood of a differing ethnic creature; in this case a Lythimpir thus making this form unique.

    Appearance: This pre-hybrid form causes the Hybrid Dhampiresa’s irises to gain two extra slits on the bottom perpendicular to each other appearing as an upside down T; glowing orchid color. Her hybrid form completes as her hair grows out past her thighs, hands and fingers stretch five inches as her finger nails grow over three inches becoming claw-like, ankles elongate as her feet stretch out and toenails grow over five inches appearing claw-like as well, two slits join the single irises creating a reversed T glowing orchid in color. Strength and stamina are heightened.

    [Insight: Berserk DNA Hybrid Dhampiresa form]

    Description: This occurred as a result of her weakened body not being able to stabilize the blood changes and thus her own blood combats the Lythimpir blood which invokes her DNA to alter her body. This form is unique to the Dhampiresa solely.

    Appearance: Her body then begins to float and convulses. Hair turning completely red-violet, veins protruding as well as amethyst colored slash wounds mark her entire body, the sclera becomes black in color as the irises and pupils turn indigo and her clothes become tethered. The altering seems to have affected her persona and abilities.

    [Insight: Zombie]

    Description: Is a corpse reanimated by a sorcerer through a spell. It’s origin is Haiti.

    Appearance: The corpse is no one in particular as the sorcerer simply will cast their spell over any grave sight. However, the sorcerer is sure to use a fresh corpse as it will be much more sustainable for the commands than a decomposed body. Although, the corpse will become greatly disfigured through the spell’s process.

    [Insight: Bokor]

    Description: Is a sorcerer who uses black and white magic to cast spells, curses or to create creatures. It’s origin is Haiti.

    [Insight: Ghoul]

    Description: Is a desert dwelling jinn possessing the ability to change its form into any animal or human. Their true form is that of a spirit. It’s origin is Arabia.

    Appearance: Golden colored mist appearing in the form of a footless demon. Every Ghoul’s true form varies.

    [Insight: Wyvern]

    Description: Is a legendary two winged, two legged, single tailed creature. It’s origin is Great Britain.

    Appearance: It’s body is ruby red in color, completely covered in spikes, having no arms and a barbed tail.

    [Insight: Lindworm]

    Description: Is a legendary wingless creature with a long body, bipedal and single tail with a venomous bite. It’s origin is Germany.

    Appearance: It’s body has a emerald green color, lengthy serpentine body and has parts of its body intertwined.

    [Insight: Guivre]

    Description: Is a legendary creature with a long body and horned head who spreads plagues through its breath. It’s origin is France.

    Appearance: It’s body has a sapphire blue color, long serpentine body, the single tail splits in two at the end and has five horns on the head; it’s forehead containing largest two.

    [Insight: Golem]

    Description: Is a mythical construct created to serve its creator; either a greatly empowered sorcerer or wizard. It is constructed from inanimate matter consisting usually of rock or mud; resembling a humanoid. This construct has no mind, soul and cannot speak. It’s origin is Jewish.

    Appearance: It is constructed from inanimate matter consisting usually of rock or mud thus the body will have a brownish color of sorts; resembling a humanoid. It has no mind, soul and cannot speak.

    [Insight: Căpcăun]

    Description: This is a type of ogre having the head of a dog and body of a man. It is muscular and usually carries a club of sorts. Although, sometimes it can have two heads.

    Appearance: A cruel and bloodthirsty creature this is. They can range from giant to dwarf size and are strong. Their bodies’ colors vary but are usually in the brownish area. The head resembles that of a dog and the body are humanoid appearing like a muscular man.

    [Insight: Tengu]

    Description: Is a demon having human and avian characteristics. They possess a magical hauchiwa (feathered fan) which it uses to stir up great winds.

    Appearance: It is a large aerial humanoid with a red face and or a large or long nose.


    --> Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act I: Secret
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act II: Betrayal
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act III: Revenge
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act IV: Crisis
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act V: Chance
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VI: Strife
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VII: Pressure
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VIII: Change
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act IX: Patience
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act X: Heartbeat
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XI: Hidden
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XII: Torment
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XIII: Deviate
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XIV: Torture
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XV: Cringe
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVI: Cruel
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part I
    Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part II
     
         

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    I badly want to read it but I'm just can't finish with works and revisions to concentrate on a fun moment. After exams, I'll catch up with your FF first before starting with the new manga I have on my list, that's a promise.

    And on your first note, I'm glad your readers have motivated you enough to write this till the end. What a waste it will have been. I'll leave the thread now before I'm tempted to read the last lines and ruin my moment later on.
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

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    I badly want to read it but I'm just can't finish with works and revisions to concentrate on a fun moment. :p After exams, I'll catch up with your FF first before starting with the new manga I have on my list, that's a promise.

    And on your first note, I'm glad your readers have motivated you enough to write this till the end. What a waste it will have been. I'll leave the thread now before I'm tempted to read the last lines and ruin my moment later on.
    Let me first start off by saying thank you for the rep and for the comment like seconds after I post this fanfic XD Thank you again for mentioning about the readers that have read up until now. Yes that plus I suppose I didn't want let you or Mikey down as I know how much you enjoy mine and Mikey initially inspired me to write. I am pleased that I was able to finish this even though what the future holds for me in writing is pretty vague at the moment. I definitely cannot wait for you to catch up to every act leading up to the final release!!! Good luck and ganbatte! ;)
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

    sorry i was late but this was just fabulous Octavian is my fav though
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by naruto kyuubi View Post
    sorry i was late but this was just fabulous Octavian is my fav though
    Please there is nothing to apologize for and I thank you for following my work up until the end ;) Thank you again for the compliment and yes Octavian is a pretty awesome captivating character I suppose ^.^
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

    A fine ending to a long journey. Finally Lulian's foul deeds have ended and Tiberiu could part the world with peace of mind. In the end all their efforts combined counted in achieving this goal and they held nothing but good feelings for each other. I like how it all ended Job well done, job very well done!
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by danivass View Post
    A fine ending to a long journey. Finally Lulian's foul deeds have ended and Tiberiu could part the world with peace of mind. In the end all their efforts combined counted in achieving this goal and they held nothing but good feelings for each other. I like how it all ended :) Job well done, job very well done! :p
    I'm pleased that the ending I chose on was accepted ^.^ If you only knew that I actually had several alternate endings and finally decided on this one. I felt even though Tiberiu was the main protagonist that the limelight should not only be on or end with his character. Thank you so much my friend for sticking t out till the very end and for your opinion ;) If you don't mind me asking did you ever have a favorite character or one that you at least liked?
     
         

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    Hey there dude! Finally read all of the chapters I missed and DAMN! Excellent work on the entire story and an excellent ending! I must say that it was filled with twists and turns and was an extremely well developed and well written tale! I must say that I was quite interested in Rahmah and her various sand abilities. I also really liked that AmantBror dude and Tiberiu's final EPIC transformation. Thanks for writing such a tantalizing tale of vengeance and epicness. ~Haka~
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

    Quote Originally Posted by Hakachi View Post
    Hey there dude! Finally read all of the chapters I missed and DAMN! Excellent work on the entire story and an excellent ending! I must say that it was filled with twists and turns and was an extremely well developed and well written tale! I must say that I was quite interested in Rahmah and her various sand abilities. I also really liked that AmantBror dude and Tiberiu's final EPIC transformation. Thanks for writing such a tantalizing tale of vengeance and epicness. ~Haka~
    I'm so happy you approved! I was awaiting for the readers you had yet to catch up and I'm glad you did! Thank you for the compliments as I had hoped the readers would at the very least accept how it all ended. It is cool to see that you liked the Ghoul and the last revealed character AmantBror Well thank you for seeing it to its finale
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

    I’d start my last review of your series with your note itself where you say that you most likely would have ceased continuation if a given situation was presented. So today I’ll quote:

    “Those who rise to fame by striving in the light are talents but those who stands firm by striving in the dark are gems.”

    You, my friend, are such a writing gem. With the limited views and hard times, you kept believing in your vision and your work and silently delivered the end of a fantastic idea with guts and brilliancy. It saddens me almost to see that only I 'thanked' this last chapter of yours while your story was so awesome.

    This chapter was fantastic. Delivering a finale is hard but succeeding in delivering that conclusion by depicting the hardest and most important fight deserve all merits. Yes, your language again catalyzed the fights. It was a fight where you should be very cautious of every detail because it’s fast-paced in every terms – power-ups, twists and action. But still, it’s so full of adrenaline that you cherish every single line.

    I loved how every character of Tiberiu’s group and even his Inner Self were involved in this fight. Realistic but also very well-incorporated. Whether it’s the power given by Rahmah, the support of Venera and Neculai or the back-plot of Octavian, every piece seem well in-place. The twin death was the perfect finish if I take a look back as from now.

    Any mistakes in this chapter?

    Well, some places the lines seemed amateurish but then again, the plot and battle was so brilliantly written and the series as a whole was so fantastic, that complains need to be buried.

    Any regrets?

    Yeah, the same regret that you don’t have money to make this an anime or a movie. And an epic soundtrack could have elevated this last battle. It was so enthralling to see those aura offenses and gore action. And yeah, I think you could have elongated Tiberiu’s last words to make his death more poignant.

    Otherwise, the ending with the other ”alive” characters was very well-done. The love story of Ruxandra and Neculai – which I found weird previously – remain weird lol but still funny and heartwarming now because all those characters suffered so much in this adventure. I wonder what Octavian wants to do next but I like his mystery side, so let it be. Ending the story with the flow of Venera-Tibeiriu’s impossible love was the perfect finish.

    I want to keep lavishing praises on you but the best way I can end this review is by saying:

    “Thanks for the treat!”
     
         
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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

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    I’d start my last review of your series with your note itself where you say that you most likely would have ceased continuation if a given situation was presented. So today I’ll quote:

    “Those who rise to fame by striving in the light are talents but those who stands firm by striving in the dark are gems.”

    You, my friend, are such a writing gem. With the limited views and hard times, you kept believing in your vision and your work and silently delivered the end of a fantastic idea with guts and brilliancy. It saddens me almost to see that only I 'thanked' this last chapter of yours while your story was so awesome.

    This chapter was fantastic. Delivering a finale is hard but succeeding in delivering that conclusion by depicting the hardest and most important fight deserve all merits. Yes, your language again catalyzed the fights. It was a fight where you should be very cautious of every detail because it’s fast-paced in every terms – power-ups, twists and action. But still, it’s so full of adrenaline that you cherish every single line.

    I loved how every character of Tiberiu’s group and even his Inner Self were involved in this fight. Realistic but also very well-incorporated. Whether it’s the power given by Rahmah, the support of Venera and Neculai or the back-plot of Octavian, every piece seem well in-place. The twin death was the perfect finish if I take a look back as from now.

    Any mistakes in this chapter?

    Well, some places the lines seemed amateurish but then again, the plot and battle was so brilliantly written and the series as a whole was so fantastic, that complains need to be buried.

    Any regrets?

    Yeah, the same regret that you don’t have money to make this an anime or a movie. And an epic soundtrack could have elevated this last battle. It was so enthralling to see those aura offenses and gore action. And yeah, I think you could have elongated Tiberiu’s last words to make his death more poignant.

    Otherwise, the ending with the other ”alive” characters was very well-done. The love story of Ruxandra and Neculai – which I found weird previously – remain weird lol but still funny and heartwarming now because all those characters suffered so much in this adventure. I wonder what Octavian wants to do next but I like his mystery side, so let it be. Ending the story with the flow of Venera-Tibeiriu’s impossible love was the perfect finish.

    I want to keep lavishing praises on you but the best way I can end this review is by saying:

    “Thanks for the treat!”

    I thank you immensely for that almost poetic sounding verse-it was beautiful Thank you again for your kind inspirational words and I too wish that more viewers visited but like you said I believed and completed with it. Yes I too think creating an ending to anything is the most complex and I'm ecstatic that you thought I did ^.^

    Thankfully, I was successful with the action which is another important factor. My biggest fear was not being able to bring it all together from the beginning, middle and end but from your words I' d say I worried too much lol

    I can elaborate as to why some lines were amateurish. I'll say the two main reasons are my lack of education. I don't know if I ever told you I only completed eighth grade and never entered high school and two is the drugs I did over five years ago which I completely regret as my memory has suffered. Not to mention, a more dangerous outcome could have resulted and I am grateful that I never got addicted and was able to quit cold turkey. I only did the drugs due to lack of friends. Since I left school, it was very difficult to socialize with people my age and I met the wrong crowd. Believe it or not they were slightly younger than me but possessed street smarts thus they appeared very knowledgeable when it came to the outside life. I was even in a GED program while I was involved with those dudes and left it as a result something else I regret as I have yet to return to school and I'm still in the process -_- I just wanted to let you know that it wasn't because I was lazy or anything like that.

    Thank you once again. I myself have thought about my work transcending into the big screen and it is cool though I'm sure the writers, producers and directors would want to make changes to the script, etc. I actually did have Tiberiu's final speech longer though I chose to shorten it.

    Happy to hear that the "open ending" was taken like it should have had a closed ending which many do like. Your comments over Ruxandra/Neculai are the most humorous but I also do take it in the critiquing seriously.

    You made me think in your concluding comments whether or not I should create a side story to bring a "close" to this story although it remains just a thought lol

    Thank you for the millionth time for your views, posts and above all; honesty has helped me to sharpen my skills
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

    Man.... Ho boy what a journey this has been. Where to start?
    I regret taking this long before catching up as I should have been there at every release with a comment. I know you've waited forever for my views, and I feel that this will just become a shell of what my opinions would have become if I commented each week. Alas, last year was quite turbulent, and FF in general didn't appeal to me that much. Not even NB itself was able to gain my interests other than new manga chapters at some periods.

    Luckily all that has changed now, and I'm looking forward to commenting on your latest chapter of your newest FF, and at every new release from now on. This might just become a final sum up comment on your FF, which could have been much more, but I'm glad I didn't let the chance to finally get to read through the end of this FF slip away from me.
    I might not be as great at writing walls of detailed opinions like Escorp, but I'll try my best.

    As I've read on from chapter to chapter, I've also gone through the comments on each of them, and quite frankly I feel that Escorp is the perfect reviewer as he never fails to leave out a detail, and I must say that he gave pretty accurate descriptions on each chapters, that went well with my own take on them. So henceforth, I'll try to focus the rest of this post on the final three parts chapter.

    First of all, part one. I think this is the first time I saw Escorp giving some less good criticism. Not meant in a bad way, but in a way for the writer to improve and get even better, which at this point seems quite hard, seeing how well of a writer you are already. Like I stated in one of the VMs or Pms I sent along the way, I feel that you have exceeded Black Despair by miles with this FF. Well done my friend

    As for Escorp criticism, I kinda agree at some parts, however I strongly disagree at the part with the battle between Neculai and the pure blood resulting in romance. I loved that part, and quite frankly, I think this part in the whole of your FF, is the part that made me smile the most. It was unexpected, but yet in the cards. Ever since the beginning, I always thought one of the three following would happen to Neculai;
    He would die a "premature" death, he would betray Tiberiu or he would fell in love.
    For me, his character as well as Octavian, is the one that have made the most impact in this story. There is just something with their characters that make them more unique than the others. Something special that I think you incorporated into their personality quite well.

    You may not have specifically detailed the romance scene too much, but it can't really be helped at this point in the FF if you ask me. It's closing the end and you more or less have to shift focus towards that, instead of taking too much sideways describing "less" important aspects that either are incorporated under way, or have slowly been hinted and build upon along the way. Describing romance is not a part of either of us (me, you and Escorp)' writing caliber that has been explored too much. I've only written two "romantic" scenes so far, and I pretty much got mixed feedbacks on it It's not easy, and neither should it be when most of the focus is set on the fighting and general character build up. If this romantic part would have had a larger portion of the FF as a whole, I guess I can agree with Escorp that it should have been elaborated more, but as a stand alone scene, it's quite good as it stand.

    Hmm... You know the feeling you get when you leave the cinema... The feeling that the movie spoke for itself? I'm kind of left with that feeling. It's a good feeling, that doesn't need much describing. You feel you have so much to say, yet you're at a satisfied point where it's a little hard to get out the points, as they usually comes sometime after the movie has sunken in.

    The final battle was epic. And not just grand, but I think it was the real final battle we never got in Black Despair. Each character is very well build up and thought out. And all the among of time you must have put in planning all the different monsters and their abilities, and still making it hold together... I'm in awe. The ending was touching, though I started getting the feeling this was going to become the outcome the longer I got into the final part. It reminds me of something I just can't put my finger on, it seem familiar, yet fresh. I was starting to wonder how you were going to tie all the ends up at the end, but you managed to pull through quite well. Even laying foundations for a possible future sequel/side story like you hinted towards?

    Escorp has pretty much summed it all up perfectly, though I still got to disagree with him on the romantic part which I found both humorous and interesting at once. It was a good tie breaker from all the fighting and seriousness, even though it was a short one.

    I also regret missing out on thanking your two last chapters as I notice now that I missed out on them:-/

    I still feel like I should and got so much to say...
    This was suppose to be the grand final post to sum it all up, but I can't think of too much else to say without going too far into details.
    I guess it might be because I stated some of my thoughts in VMs as I went on, but all in all I'm left with a smile on my face. An excellent story, well thought out and worked out setting and theme.

    I might add that when I began reading this FF, I had no idea how it would eventually end up. At first look it seemed like a straight forward Vampire/Werewolf themed one, but it turned out to be so much, much more.

    Like I mentioned in my last VM, I want to elaborate some more on Van Helsing. The ending of this FF kinda reminded me of it, though with a mix of Team Taka and Orochimaru. I think I'll leave that for discussing in VMs

    Keep the PM I sent you in mind as I would like to discuss that with you future as well.
    Other than that, this is your greatest work yet, and I can only imagine where you will take your new FF from here. I guess that will be the next stop ^^

    Keep up the good work my friend, and let nothing come in the way of your excellent writing ability.
     
         

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    @Mikey, This is indeed the biggest feedback I’ve ever received and I can’t thank you enough for it!!!!! You really didn’t have to attempt to pull off an Escorp wall of text but I commend you for your attempt which ended up surpassing his lol I just don’t think I can even rival it I’ve had those moments myself so I can vouch for not wanting to log-in NBase lol Not to mention having a busy life. It has changed as I am happy to state that you’re now up to date and I know it is an epic feeling to be in the present ^.^

    Thanks and I’ve felt like Infernal Rebirth was superior to Black Despair I’m quite surprised that you felt so highly about the romance part. I suppose it was a little bizarre how it came to occur however, I somehow felt like adding it in and I am glad that I did since it was taken with a good response such as you ^.^ Yes-Neculai was indeed the "wild card" in the bunch and I could’ve decided a number of things-I believe even death came to mind lol I’m happy to hear that the supporting characters seemed more like protagonists. Yes-the romance situation was brief as the ff had begun its end and I really couldn’t fit it in and it was a subject that I’ve rarely ever covered just as you stated. I suppose I do regret not giving more insight into their quickened relationship -_-

    lol about the feel at the cinema reference Thank you for the compliments on how I pulled everything together in the end I too feel that the battle scenes seemed more intense compared to Black Despair. I myself have thought of creating a sequel but I’m not sure if it will ever occur. What pleases me the most is how you stated that in the beginning you couldn’t map out the outcome of this ff! :D

    Again I can't thank you enough for catching up, your enormous wall of text feedback and for being such a good friend
     
         

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    @Mikey, This is indeed the biggest feedback I’ve ever received and I can’t thank you enough for it!!!!! You really didn’t have to attempt to pull off an Escorp wall of text but I commend you for your attempt which ended up surpassing his lol I just don’t think I can even rival it I’ve had those moments myself so I can vouch for not wanting to log-in NBase lol Not to mention having a busy life. It has changed as I am happy to state that you’re now up to date and I know it is an epic feeling to be in the present ^.^

    Thanks and I’ve felt like Infernal Rebirth was superior to Black Despair I’m quite surprised that you felt so highly about the romance part. I suppose it was a little bizarre how it came to occur however, I somehow felt like adding it in and I am glad that I did since it was taken with a good response such as you ^.^ Yes-Neculai was indeed the "wild card" in the bunch and I could’ve decided a number of things-I believe even death came to mind lol I’m happy to hear that the supporting characters seemed more like protagonists. Yes-the romance situation was brief as the ff had begun its end and I really couldn’t fit it in and it was a subject that I’ve rarely ever covered just as you stated. I suppose I do regret not giving more insight into their quickened relationship -_-

    lol about the feel at the cinema reference Thank you for the compliments on how I pulled everything together in the end I too feel that the battle scenes seemed more intense compared to Black Despair. I myself have thought of creating a sequel but I’m not sure if it will ever occur. What pleases me the most is how you stated that in the beginning you couldn’t map out the outcome of this ff! :D

    Again I can't thank you enough for catching up, your enormous wall of text feedback and for being such a good friend
    Sure thing my friend Together with Escorp, you're definitely the best writer on the base!
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

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    Sure thing my friend Together with Escorp, you're definitely the best writer on the base!
    Please you're always lumped together with us in that category without a doubt
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

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    Please you're always lumped together with us in that category without a doubt
    I second this one.

    Also, Mikey - This is Kuroi's chapter and the review is meant to be for him. Why is my name mentioned more times than his name in your review lol?
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

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    Please you're always lumped together with us in that category without a doubt
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    I second this one.

    Also, Mikey - This is Kuroi's chapter and the review is meant to be for him. Why is my name mentioned more times than his name in your review lol?
    Aww...:D


    , we already went through this
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

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    I second this one.

    Also, Mikey - This is Kuroi's chapter and the review is meant to be for him. Why is my name mentioned more times than his name in your review lol?
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    Aww...:D


    , we already went through this
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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

    wow that was a great FF you truly have a talent for writing i can't wait to read the next one +rep
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

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    wow that was a great FF you truly have a talent for writing i can't wait to read the next one +rep
    Thank you for reading the entire thing lol As well as for the +rep and comment
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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

    The amount of satisfaction I got reading Lulian's demise - absolutely fantastic. Splendid job with this entire Fanfiction - I know I've said that in every chapter, but from start to finish I was hooked on everything that took place, and you wrapped it all up in this finale perfectly. Thanks for suggesting that I take a look at it a few weeks ago, I am most definitely glad I did.
     
         

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    Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XVII: Surrender Part III

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    The amount of satisfaction I got reading Lulian's demise - absolutely fantastic. Splendid job with this entire Fanfiction - I know I've said that in every chapter, but from start to finish I was hooked on everything that took place, and you wrapped it all up in this finale perfectly. Thanks for suggesting that I take a look at it a few weeks ago, I am most definitely glad I did.
    Again you indirectly humor me to no end with your feelings against Lulian's character No no, I don't mind repeated praises :D Thank you for commenting each and every act as you didn't have to and I'm even more happy that you liked it overall! D No, thank you my friend for accepting to check it out and giving it a try even though it contained some folklore you didn't necessarily like I can't wait for you opinion over the sequel!!! :D
     
         

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