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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

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    (Hakkin: Tenrai Bachi) – Platinum Release: Divine Retribution
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defense
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The performs three handseals (Dog -> Boar -> Ram) and then stomps the ground causing a giant mass of glistening Platinum, in the shape of a demon-like orge/troll with the same size as Gamahiro, to rise up from the ground. This orge (picture below) is of humanoid form and wields an iron club proportionate to his size. This giant exhibits immense strength and is capable of creating craters with a single punch. This jutsu can act as either an attack or a defense (depending on how the user's uses this jutsu); and can be used for such things such as defending against incoming attacks or lifting the user to a higher position. Due to his huge size and strength, coupled with his composition (Platinum), this giant possesses an ability in which, by using his iron club, can destroy/disperse one fire-based jutsu (any rank) by slamming it onto/against the jutsu with extreme force. However, this can only be done once per battle and, once he does, he will break apart/disintegrate into inanimate chunks of Platinum at the end of that turn (the turn he uses the ability).
    Note: Can only use once per battle.
    Note: Lasts four turns (unless he uses his ability) and after that, will break apart into inanimate chunks of Platinum.
    Note: Unique ability can only be used once per battle, and will result in him getting destroyed at the end of that turn.
    Note: No S rank Platinum techniques during the following turn.

    The giant however, won't be red but the colour of normal glistening Platinum.
    ~Declined~ You have no control over iron release so why is this troll wielding an iron club? I believe you are mistaking this technique with a summoning which wouldn't get approved either way. If you want this to get approved you are going to have to drastically decrease the size of the troll and remove the ability of dispersing any ranked fire. Replace it with something more fitting and approvalable.
    (Hakkin: Tenrai Bachi) – Platinum Release: Divine Retribution
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defense
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The performs three handseals (Dog -> Boar -> Ram) and then stomps the ground causing a giant mass of glistening Platinum, in the shape of a demon-like orge/troll about half the size as Gamahiro, to rise up from the ground. This orge (picture below) is of humanoid form and wields a club made out of Platinum proportionate to his size. This giant exhibits immense strength and is capable of creating craters with a single punch. This jutsu can act as either an attack or a defense (depending on how the user's uses this jutsu); and can be used for such things such as defending against incoming attacks or lifting the user to a higher position. Thrice per battle, this troll is capable of performing up to A-rank platinum jutsus (which counts towards the user's jutsu count). At the end of four turns, he will break apart/disintegrate into inanimate chunks of glistening Platinum.
    Note: Can only use once per battle.
    Note: Platinum jutsus counts towards the user's jutsu count.
    Note: Lasts four turns and after that, will break apart into inanimate chunks of Platinum.
    Note: No S rank Platinum techniques during the following turn.

    The giant however, won't be red but the colour of normal glistening Platinum.
    My bad about the iron club, he's meant to be totally made of Platinum.
    ~Approved~ Changed the range to short. If you are not satisfied with my decision then please let me know via PM/VM and I shall come back and edit my verdict.

    Quote Originally Posted by McKnockout View Post
    (Hakkin: Kira-Kujira Akurobachikku) – Platinum Release: Orca Acrobatics
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user concentrates chakra into the ground and then stomps the ground causing four masses of glistening Platinum, in the shape of large orcas (or killer whales), to rise from the ground and shoot out towards the target. These ferocious orcas travel/swim towards the opponent at high speed and are capable of jumping/leaping off the ground and into the air; smashing the opponent into the air (force is enough to break bones). These orcas are almost twice the size of Kisame's shark jutsus with sharp teeth that can easily tear flesh from bone.
    Note: Can only use 3 times per battle.
    ~Declined~ What's up with these over sized creations? You're going to have to be a bit more specific in terms of the size of the whales. Kisame has a lot of shark jutsu, for example the S ranked version is quite big and you could be relating it to that. Now, can you imagine that times two in size? I will not be accepting that. You're also going to have to include some more descriptions in terms of how the whales can travel. Can you make them travel from different angles? Do all of them travel in a straight line? Can you control their movements after they have been made? A lot of things are still missing.
    (Hakkin: Kira-Kujira Akurobachikku) – Platinum Release: Orca Acrobatics
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user concentrates chakra into the ground and then stomps the ground causing four masses of glistening Platinum, in the shape of large orcas (or killer whales), to rise from the ground and shoot out towards the target. These ferocious orcas travel/swim towards the opponent at high speed and are capable of jumping/leaping off the ground and into the air; smashing the opponent into the air (force is enough to break bones). These orcas are almost twice the size of Kisame's shark jutsus (i.e. the sharks in "Water Style: 5 feeding sharks") with sharp teeth that can easily tear flesh from bone. They are created specifically to take down a certain target and will follow him where ever he goes.
    Note: Can only use 3 times per battle.
    Again, sorry for the lack of description. It wasnt my intention to make them twice the size of Kisame's S-rank shark jutsu, not for an A-rank anyway.
    ~Declined~ Define "High speed", include some more restrictions and add a clarification regarding the last sentence of your description. If the orcas can follow the target where ever he/she goes then in my case, if I activate my flight technique, would they stay airborne and keep following me around? I know what's not really what you have in mind with this technique but it still needs to be defined 100% to avoid any future problems.
     
         
    Last edited by Mathias; 06-20-2012 at 06:07 PM.

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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

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    (Mashamaruton: Ma-chi sono doaai) - Marshmallow Release: March of the Peeps
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will remove five marshmallows from their pouch and toss them in the air towards the opponent. Once released they form a series of four hand seals. During the seals the marshmallows split and form into twenty-five (five per marshmallow) chicken sized birds that dive bomb the target from multiple angles. When they hit they target they deal concussive damage and splatter into marshmallow fluff, covering them in the sticky substance.
    -Can be used twice per battle.
    ~Declined~ Almost there, I just need you to reduce the number of chicken sized birds.
    (Mashamaruton: Ma-chi sono doaai) - Marshmallow Release: March of the Peeps
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will remove five marshmallows from their pouch and toss them in the air towards the opponent. Once released they form a series of four hand seals. During the seals the marshmallows split and form into fifteen (three per marshmallow) chicken sized birds that dive bomb the target from multiple angles. When they hit they target they deal concussive damage and splatter into marshmallow fluff, covering them in the sticky substance.
    -Can be used twice per battle.
    ~Approved~
    Reduced number of birds.

    (Mashamaruton: Itokuzo-wad) - Marshmallow Release: Fluff Wad
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: After having ingested marshmallows, the user forms two hand seals and spits out a condensed ball of marshmallow fluff. The ball is about twice the size of a basketball and hits with moderate concussive force. It splatters upon impact leaving whatever it hits covered in a thick and sticky goop.
    -Can be used four times per battle.
    -Requires one marshmallow.
    ~Approved~
    Quote Originally Posted by Typhon View Post
    (Mashamaruton: Kokkaku-a-itokuzu) - Marshmallow Release: Build-a-Fluff
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: A very basic technique, the user is able to manipulate a pre-existing source of marshmallow fluff to create several basic shapes such as pillars, ropes, shields, etc. The mass of the shapes created cannot exceed the mass of the fluff source used.
    -Can't change the properties of the fluff.
    -Can be used four times per battle.

    I was thinking it could make those shapes in the same way that water can, since its denser and more solid than water it should be able to make those shapes more easily. But if you still think those shapes aren't feasible I'll remove them in the next submission.
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    -Declined- It's not that I think you wouldn't be able to create those shapes, it's just that they'd be soft, and not really useful.
    (Mashamaruton: Kokkaku-a-itokuzu) - Marshmallow Release: Build-a-Fluff
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: A very basic technique, the user is able to manipulate a pre-existing source of marshmallow fluff to create a number of shapes such as ropes, shields, tendrils, etc. The mass of the shapes created cannot exceed the mass of the fluff source used. Since the fluff is soft these creations don't do much damage, but their sticky property makes them useful in binding or trapping the opponent.
    -Can't change the properties of the fluff.
    -Can be used four times per battle.
    -Requires a source of fluff.
    ~Approved~
    (Kongo-ton: Kongo-ibara Pacchi) - Adamantine Release: Adamant Brier Patch
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user forms a series of five hand seals and claps there hands together. Doing this causes large vine-like adamantine structures (a foot in diameter) to shoot up from the earth and fill the battlefield creating a very large and dense "brier patch" over the battefield. The vines are covered in sharp thorns that tear the enemy's flesh as they form the patch. This technique is also large enough to trap a large summon, though the thorns aren't long enough to cause serious damage to one.
    -Can be used twice per battle.
    -No S-rank or above adamantine techniques in the same turn.
    -Looks roughly like:

    ~Declined~ For its rank and the actual technique itself, you are missing quite a few restrictions.
     
         
    Last edited by Mathias; 06-20-2012 at 06:14 PM.

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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ View Post
    Shinju: Ame No Shinju (Pearl Release: Rain of Pearls)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damge Points: 30
    Description: The user releases from Gourd (or from one of the shell summons) a giant pearl, then the user sends the giant pearl into the sky, scatteres it into pearl powder upon the sky and transform the powder into tiny winy thousands of pearls then pour them down from the sky aiming the opponent to burie him alive.

    Notes:
    Must be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~
    ~Declined~ Incorrect chakra cost.




    Shinju: Shiro No Hyōtan (Pearl Release: White Gourd)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A legendary Gourd size of Gaara´s gourd, white with green markings made of solid pearl material which has been buried hundreds of years beneath the ocean and contains tens of unique shells with strong pearl chakra and they are able to keep producing little pearls where they live and bread inside the Gourd, the Gourd itself has been wielded by the Elders of Shells who have strong pearl chakra. Shells from Gourd are able to produce huge amount of pearls to keep unlimited amount of little pearls so the user of the Gourd is able to manipulate pearls as his/her wish, the Elder of Shells always carried this Gourd to the battle fields and merged his pearl chakra to the Gourd so that he will be able to manipulate the pearls inside for many usage (attack, defense and supplementary) He passed down some of these Gourds to those who have been loyal to the Shells kingdom and trained by the Elder himself how to use this Gourd. Elder made several of these Gourds so that each user can have one Gourd.



    Notes:
    To use this Gourd, person has to learn how to use it from ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~
    This Gourd cannot be destroyed
    This Gourd is considered as Weapon so the user cannot use his/her CW in the same battle he uses this gourd



    (this is same as that Jar that was posted with element, but i changed it to Gourd cause i couldn´t find any nice picture of Jar , but if this is too big Gaara rip-off than i will change it back into that Jar)
    ~Declined~ Considering its constantly active creating perals this technique should take away a certain amount of chakra per turn. Also I want you to take out the indestructible part and yes change it to a jar.





    Shinju: Kyojin Maruishi (Pearl Release: Giant Boulder)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Gourd (or Shell Summon), then merges them into giant boulder made of pearls with sharp spikes all around the boulder and the user sends this boulder to the opponent with high speed and the boulder will roll over the opponent brutally.

    Notes:
    Can only be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~
    Can only be used 4 times per battle
    ~Declined~ Clarify "giant" and high speed". For all I know it could be the size of Gamabunta since that would be considered giant.


    Re-Submitting
    Note : Mig gave me his permission to resubmit this via MSN


    Shinju: Shiro No Bin (Pearl Release: The White Jar)

    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A legendaryJar size of Gaara´s gourd, white with green markings made of solid pearl material which has been buried hundreds of years beneath the ocean and contains tens of unique shells with strong pearl chakra and they are able to keep producing little pearls where they live and bread inside the Jar, the Jar itself has been wielded by the Elders of Shells who have strong pearl chakra. Shells from the Jar are able to produce huge amount of pearls to keep unlimited amount of little pearls so the user of the Gourd is able to manipulate pearls as his/her wish, the Elder of Shells always carried this Jar to the battle fields and merged his pearl chakra to the Gourd so that he will be able to manipulate the pearls inside for many usage (attack, defense and supplementary), but the effect is the Jar drain the user chakra every time the user use it that’s why only a strong chakra possession and balance control ability able to use this Jar, meaning only Kage Rank. He passed down some of these Jars to those who have been loyal to the Shells kingdom and trained by the Elder himself how to use this Jar. The Elder made several of these Jars so that each user can have one Jar.



    Notes:
    - To use this Jar, person has to learn how to use it from ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
    - This Jar can be destroyed by a strong lightning jutsu
    - This Jar is considered as Weapon so the user cannot use his/her CW in the same battle he uses this Jar
    - Every time the user use pearl jutsu using this Jar, it will drain -10 chakra and after 7 turn use the user will be exhausted and lower their speed
    - After 3 turn use the Jar, the user can't use the Jar for 1 turn to give the pearl time to reload the pearls chakra production, that's applied to the following turns.
    - Can only be use for 10 turns max no more than that or the Jar will be destroyed afterwards.

    ~Declined~ Okay, first of all you still left the word 'Gourd' a few times in the description. Second of all at the part I highlighted; That is a very useless description you are trying to pass off as a restriction. You know why? To use the element you already need to be Kage rank so I would suggest you remove that unnecessary text in the submission. The requirement to use this Jar is also another obvious requirement when teaching the element to one of the two students. As for the last few highlights I have a question. Are you confusing turns with how many times per battle the jar can be used? And if not the you really need to re-write that because as it stands it is a mess to read and understand clearly.
    Picture of the Jar


    Shinju: Ame No Shinju (Pearl Release: Rain of Pearls)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damge Points: 40
    Description: The user releases from his Jar (or from one of the shell summons) a giant pearl, then the user sends the giant pearl into the sky, scattered it into pearl powder upon the sky and transform the powder into tiny winy thousands of pearls then pour them down from the sky aiming the opponent to buried him/her alive.

    Notes:
    Must be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ Okay I want you to reword the transforming into powder thing because that's not what your approved CE submission is about. You can manipulate solid pearl not powdered form. As for the thousands of pearls I need a more defined amount. Lastly, clarify the actual size of the "giant pearl". How big is this "giant pearl?
    Shinju: Kyojin Maruishi (Pearl Release: Giant Boulder)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Gourd (or Shell Summon), then merges them into giant boulder made of pearls half size of Gamabunta with sharp spikes all around the boulder and the user sends this boulder to the opponent with fast speed and the boulder will roll over the opponent brutally.

    Notes:
    Can only be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
    Can only be used 4 times per battle
    ~Declined~ You do realize how long it would actually take to release such a ridiculous amount of little pearls to form a boulder made of pearl half the size of Gama, right? You need to drastically lower the size of the boulder, and you have yet to define the speed, you simply changed it from "high" to "fast".

    Quote Originally Posted by Oasis Nara View Post
    Re-Subbmitting

    Shinju: Shiro daburufangu (Pearl Release: Double Fang)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Gourd (or Shell Summon), then form a white sharp fang in the user right and left hands, this fang are very sharp and able to pierces through solid, Steel or metal object.

    Notes:
    Can only be taught by Oasis Nara
    Can only be used 5 times per battle
    ~Declined~ How long do these sharp fangs last? And change the type to attack, or else you will be forced to drop your current CW and replace it for this pearl custom weapon.

    Shinju: P1 Bunshin "Petron" (Pearl Release: P1 Clone "Petron")
    Rank:B
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:20
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: P1 clone is a copy of the user but in shape of a white pale person. The clone itself can only use pearl release according of the user gain and knowledge of the pearl release, it can also utilize any pearl release even without having the white gourd or the shell summoning up until S-Rank pearl release.
    ~Declined~ If the clone can utilize pearl release techniques without the white gourd(Which isn't even approved?) or the shell summoning, then that means its using his own body as a source correct? And that means he can only perform pearl techniques which fall under his own body mass.


    Re-Subbmitting

    Shinju: Shiro daburufangu (Pearl Release: Double Fang)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Gourd (or Shell Summon), then form a white sharp fang in the user right and left hands, this fang are very sharp and able to pierces through solid, Steel or metal object.

    Notes:
    Can only be taught by Oasis Nara
    Can only be used 5 turns and vanished
    Can only be use 2 times per battle

    ~Declined~ Reduce the turns before they vanished if you want this allowed to be used twice per battle. And you really need to define the shape and size of these fangs. How many blades? How long are the sharp edges? etc, etc
    Shinju: P1 Bunshin "Petron" (Pearl Release: P1 Clone "Petron")
    Rank:B
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:20
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: P1 clone is a copy of the user but in shape of a white pale person. The clone itself can only use pearl release according of the user gain and knowledge of the pearl release, it can also utilize any pearl release even without having the white gourd or the shell summoning up until S-Rank pearl release.

    Notes:
    Can only be taught by Oasis Nara
    Can only be used 5 turns and vanished
    Can only be use 2 times per battle from the Jar / Shell Summoning

    ~Declined~ Still didn't fix what I asked for.
    [QUOTE=Oasis Nara;6181377]Shinju: P2 Bunshin "Prime" (Pearl Release: P2 Clone "Prime")

    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will summon his giant shell which it will throw out a giant pearl into the air then the user perform 5 serial hand seal then push and placed his right hand into the giant pearl when it about to land while his left hand hold his right wrist and yell “PRIME” to manipulate the giant pearl and shape it into a giant bird double size of Gamakichi, Prime is the 2nd form of pearl bunshin manipulation called the “P2”, prime able to fly into the sky high with high speed while the user ride it, Prime shape pale white and have the ability to shoot out rapidly pearl ball size of a basket ball from the sky into the opponent and the pearl ball will crush everything within the impact, prime also able to defend from similar rank jutsu using it wing.

    Note: can only be use 3 times
    Note: Must have Shell summoning contract
    Note: Can only last 2 turn in field then auto disappear
    Note: No other pearl tech while the user ride Prime
    Note: Count as two turn as the user have to summon his giant shell
    Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ I don't see how pearl is light enough to fly, let alone at high speeds as you mentioned. Lastly, the pearl clone hasn't been approved so how is this the second form of it?

    (Pāru no tsuin ken) - Twin sword of Pearl
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: 60
    Description: As the user granted to manipulate pearl so he is able to extract two rare special twin blade made of pearl from deep down the sea which only certain people have the ability to do that. this twin sword one came out from a white pearl and the other came from the black pearl, this sword will infuse with the user pearl manipulation ability then able to release pearl jutsu (white and black Pearl release) up to S-Rank Pearl jutsu without any shell summoning but each use of this twin sword they shall drain the user chakra and lower their speed ability, this twin sword doesn’t have to be summoned but the user always wield it in their back.


    Note: Must have Shell pearl manipulation ability
    Note: Shall drain -10 chakra each use
    Note: The user can use them until their chakra run out meaning only KG rank can use it and only 8 time use
    Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ How are these swords generating enough pearl to create the techniques? What's "-5 speed" mean? 5 levels from our speed chart? Do not refer to the speed chart in future submissions. And also, if this is your custom weapon you need to include it in the "Type" section.


    Re Subbmitting
    Shinju: P2 Bunshin "Prime" (Pearl Release: P2 Clone "Prime")
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will summon his giant shell which it will throw out a giant pearl then the user perform 5 serial hand seal then push and placed his right hand into the giant pearl while his left hand hold his right wrist and yell “PRIME” to manipulate the giant pearl and shape it into a giant bird double size of Gamakichi, Prime is the 2nd form of pearl bunshin manipulation called the “P2”, prime able to fly into the sky high with high speed while the user ride it, Prime shape pale white and have the ability to shoot out rapidly pearl ball size of a basket ball from the sky into the opponent and the pearl ball will crush everything within the impact, prime also able to defend from similar rank jutsu using it wing.

    Note: can only be use 3 times
    Note: Must have Shell summoning contract / White Jar
    Note: Can only last 2 turn in field then auto disappear
    Note: No other pearl tech while the user ride Prime
    Note: Count as two turn as the user have to summon his giant shell or one turn if he using the white Jar
    Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ I still don't see how pearl is light enough to fly, let alone at high speeds as you mentioned. And you do know that a clone is a near perfect copy of the users appearance, correct? What you are describing in this technique is a pearl bird not a clone.

    "I'm erased the flying pearl part"
     
         
    Last edited by Mathias; 06-20-2012 at 06:47 PM.

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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsus

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    ( Kanton: Bakuhada ) - Iron release: Blast skin
    Rank: A
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Blast skin is a technique named after it's ability to survive a blast that a normal ninja wouldn't, as if the user was wearing a blast suit. The technique is utilized by performing snake hand seal and spreading earth and fire chakra around their body or a single body part, giving tissue the properties of iron. By using this technique, user's mass and density increase, user can survive in higher temperatures that would be normally dangerous. With this user can also guide electricity but is unable of using lightning based techniques during the time being. The technique is useful when combined with taijutsu as the mass is increased and tissue hardens, causing a taijutsu damage increase.
    • User becomes weaker to lightning techniques and is unable of using any during the time this is active and any lightning techniques that hit the user will deal double the normal damage.
    • Can be used three times per battle with at least one turn interval between each usage.


    ( Shokubutsuton: Setsunai Kafun ) - Plant release: Suffocating Pollen
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive - Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A (- 5 per turn after it takes effect)
    Description: Suffocating Pollen is a simple technique that utilizes pollen to contaminate large areas. The technique begins by user forming Rat - Ox - Dragon hand seals and inhaling. During the inhaling, user concentrates a large amount of Water and Earth chakra within their lungs and mixes that with the oxygen that they inhaled. After the user has repeated this step, he/she will spew out a cloud of pollen (size depends on the amount of oxygen user breathed in and user's lung capacity). The pollen isn't exactly offensive but breathing it in can be quite dangerous. Once the pollen gets in your system, it will attach itself to unfortunate individual's respiratory organs. This limits the volume of lungs, amount of oxygen in your blood and causes immediate coughing along with temporary loss of eyesight. The effectiveness of this technique is showed in combat when the need of oxygen is at it's highest and your lungs cannot process any air, causing a slow and gruesome death through suffocation.
    • Can be used two times in a single battle.
    • Doujutsu uses can easily recognize this technique from the cloud of chakra it forms. Naked eye is able of seeing the pollen too, but it can be mistaken as dust or fine sand that's being carried around by wind in some situations.

    ~ Both Declined~ When resubmitting techniques make sure to bold the changes made.
    ( Kanton: Bakuhada ) - Iron release: Blast skin
    Rank: A
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Blast skin is a technique named after it's ability to survive a blast that a normal ninja wouldn't, as if the user was wearing a blast suit. The technique is utilized by performing snake hand seal and spreading earth and fire chakra around their body or a single body part, giving tissue the properties of iron. By using this technique, user's mass and density increase, user can survive in higher temperatures that would be normally dangerous. With this user can also guide electricity but is unable of using lightning based techniques during the time being. The technique is useful when combined with taijutsu as the mass is increased and tissue hardens, causing a taijutsu damage increase.
    • User becomes weaker to lightning techniques and is unable of using any during the time this is active and any lightning techniques that hit the user will deal double the normal damage.
    • Can be used three times per battle with at least one turn interval between each usage.

    ~Declined~ How long can it stay active for?
    ( Shokubutsuton: Setsunai Kafun ) - Plant release: Suffocating Pollen
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive - Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A (- 5 per turn after it takes effect)
    Description: Suffocating Pollen is a simple technique that utilizes pollen to contaminate large areas. The technique begins by user forming Rat - Ox - Dragon hand seals and inhaling. During the inhaling, user concentrates a large amount of Water and Earth chakra within their lungs and mixes that with the oxygen that they inhaled. After the user has repeated this step, he/she will spew out a cloud of pollen (size depends on the amount of oxygen user breathed in and user's lung capacity). The pollen isn't exactly offensive but breathing it in can be quite dangerous. Once the pollen gets in your system, it will attach itself to unfortunate individual's respiratory organs. This limits the volume of lungs, amount of oxygen in your blood and causes immediate coughing along with temporary loss of eyesight. The effectiveness of this technique is showed in combat when the need of oxygen is at it's highest and your lungs cannot process any air, causing a slow and gruesome death through suffocation.
    • Can be used two times in a single battle.
    • Doujutsu uses can easily recognize this technique from the cloud of chakra it forms. Naked eye is able of seeing the pollen too, but it can be mistaken as dust or fine sand that's being carried around by wind in some situations.

    ~Declined~ How many turns until the target dies from suffocation?
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

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    (Rubiton: Kingu o Mamoru) Ruby Release: Protect the King
    Type Attack/Defence
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (+10 per turn it stays active)
    Damage: 80 (+10 for Taijutsu)
    Description: The user molds a very thin but dense layer of ruby that covers their body w/ coat of ruby to strengthen taijutsu and to defend from direct attacks. The armor can withstand any elemental jutsu and elemental taijutsu, to which it is strong against, up to A-rank. The user will constantly focus chakra into the armor, manipulating the ruby to move with him as he moves, allowing him to move with the armor. The user can deactivate the armor at whatever time he pleases.
    *Note: Once deactivated it cannot be activated again during battle.
    *Note: Any speed enhancing jutsu would cause the armor to break under the strain of fast movement.
    *Note: Although resistant to Earth, Lightning, and Wind the armor will break after three direct hits from A-rank Earth, Lightning, and Wind attacks.
    *Note: The constant focus of chakra limits the user to Ruby, Earth and Fire elemental jutsu.(Ruby is controlled by advanced Earth and Fire manipulation)

    ~Declined~ Reduce the times it can take a direct hit from A ranks before breaking.
    Quote Originally Posted by Toku View Post
    (Rubiton- Kōdona Sekai no Tenpu Fairu) Ruby release- Attachment of the Advanced World
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 50
    Attack points: 90
    Description: the user will gather his ruby chakra releasing it as a sphere, with a ruby located at its centre, between the palms of his hands. The sphere then expands rapidly in size when being propelled towards its intended target while the user holds a one-handed hand seal. The sphere is harmless until the hand seal is released causing anything within the confinement of the sphere to be turned into ruby. If the jutsu is successful in petrifying anything within the sphere into ruby, then the user’s hand becomes ruby itself.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: Cant perform handseals if hand becomes ruby.
    *Note: Cant perform Ruby techniques next turn, A-rank and above the turn after that, and S-rank and above the turn after that one.
    ~Declined~ Pretty close to approval, I just need to you include some physical harm to the user and clarification in regards to the expanding size of the sphere.
    (Rubiton: Kingu o Mamoru) Ruby Release: Protect the King
    Type Attack/Defence
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (+10 per turn it stays active)
    Damage: 80 (+10 for Taijutsu)
    Description: The user molds a very thin but dense layer of ruby that covers their body w/ coat of ruby to strengthen taijutsu and to defend from direct attacks. The armor can withstand any elemental jutsu and elemental taijutsu, to which it is strong against, up to A-rank. The user will constantly focus chakra into the armor, manipulating the ruby to move with him as he moves, allowing him to move with the armor. The user can deactivate the armor at whatever time he pleases.
    *Note: Once deactivated it cannot be activated again during battle.
    *Note: Any speed enhancing jutsu would cause the armor to break under the strain of fast movement.
    *Note: Although resistant to Earth, Lightning, and Wind the armor will break after two direct hits from A-rank Earth, Lightning, or Wind attacks.
    *Note: Although resistant to Earth, Lightning, and Wind the armor will break after one direct hit from an S-rank Earth, Lightning, or Wind technique.
    *Note: The constant focus of chakra limits the user to Ruby, Earth and Fire elemental jutsu.(Ruby is controlled by advanced Earth and Fire manipulation)
    ~Approved~ Edited some things, if you are not satisfied with my decision then feel free drop me a VM/PM so I can change my verdict.
    (Rubiton- Kōdona Sekai no Tenpu Fairu) Ruby release- Attachment of the Advanced World
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 50
    Attack points: 90
    Description: the user will gather his ruby chakra releasing it as a sphere, with a ruby located at its centre, between the palms of his hands. The sphere then expands rapidly in size when being propelled towards its intended target while the user holds a one-handed hand seal. The sphere is harmless until the hand seal is released causing anything within the confinement of the sphere to be turned into ruby. The sphere is about 2m in diameter when it is fully expanded. If the jutsu is successful in petrifying anything within the sphere into ruby, then the user’s hand becomes ruby itself. If the jutsu fails, then the exhertion of chakra severely damages the users hand, slowing his hand seal speed for 2 turns or until healed.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: Cant perform handseals if hand becomes ruby.
    *Note: The exhertion of chakra severely damages the users hand, slowing his hand seal speed for 2 turns or until healed.
    *Note: Cant perform Ruby techniques next turn, A-rank and above the turn after that, and S-rank and above the turn after that one.
    ~Declined~ Reading this again, its oddly familiar to Mu's primitive world technique, except no molecular destruction and its a sphere xD. Anyways, you need to define the reduction of speed. As it stands, its way too vague. Lastly, I will also ask you to add some other restrictions, the last one doesn't really affect you. When coming up with ruby restrictions think of the main elements that makes ruby.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

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    Taiyofuuton: Rorien no Te [Solar Wind: Lorien Hands]
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 25
    Damage: 50
    Description: The user channels concentrated Solar Wind Chakra into their hands that issues forth a short 5 foot green light source of immense heat that is capable of igniting or burning anything flammable. This is often used as an taijutsu component, capable of blinding and burning the flesh of the opponent.
    Note: This does not hurt the user as they are immune to Solar Wind.
    Note: Lasts for 3 turns.


    ~Declined~ This jutsu shouldn't last a certain amount of turns, it should be one time per use. Also, fix the damage points.

    Taiyofuuton: Shi no Ken [Solar Wind: Death Sword]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 25
    Damage: 50
    Description: The user charges a sword with Solar Wind chakra and it is wrapped with a green aura that has the look of skulls inside it. This technique can be used in one of two ways. The user can either wave the sword and send the green arc in the exact full pattern of the wave or the user can slam the sword into the ground crackling it as it travels towards the opponent and sending the Solar Wind stream through the ground towards the opponent. Green lights come up from the ground emitting intense heat capable of burning the enemy, making the ground extremely hot like walking on hot coal.
    Note: This technique canot be used on the same sword more than 3 times or it will break.

    ~Declined~ Incorrect damage points. Also I'd like you to clarify how big/wide the wave released along with its ground variant.
    Taiyofuuton: Rorien no Te [Solar Wind: Lorien Hands]
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40

    Description: The user channels concentrated Solar Wind Chakra into their hands that issues forth a short 5 foot green light source of immense heat that is capable of igniting or burning anything flammable. This is often used as an taijutsu component, capable of blinding and burning the flesh of the opponent.
    Note: This does not hurt the user as they are immune to Solar Wind.


    ~Approved~

    Taiyofuuton: Shi no Ken [Solar Wind: Death Sword]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 25
    Damage: 40

    Description: The user charges a sword with Solar Wind chakra and it is wrapped with a green aura that has the look of skulls inside it. This technique can be used in one of two ways. The user can either wave the sword and send the green arc in the exact full pattern of the wave or the user can slam the sword into the ground crackling it as it travels towards the opponent and sending the Solar Wind stream through the ground towards the opponent. The ground is cracked 3 meters below the earth and spreads from one crack into multiple 5 meter wide cracks that go out to Long Range. Green lights come up from the ground emitting intense heat capable of burning the enemy, making the ground extremely hot like walking on hot coal.
    Note: This technique canot be used on the same sword more than 3 times or it will break.

    ~Declined~ You need to define 'multiple' and reduce the meters in the crack's width.
    ==============
    Resubmitting an Already approved Technique for more clarification on how it can be used. (The name is of the jutsu is a link to its previous approval)

    Taiyofuton: Kaze Chaimu [Solar Wind: Wind Chimes]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range:Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: User throws 5 kunai that are all connected by strings while expelling a hurricane solar wind from their mouth (looks like and has the same push the user backwards power as Hurricane fist when expelled). The solar wind picks up the kunai and causes them to clang together like wind chimes. This noise however, is quite loud, and deafens the opponent, forcing them to hold their hands to their ears in an attempt to drown out the sound.
    I would like it changed to this please.

    Taiyofuuton: Kaze Chaimu [Solar Wind: Wind Chimes]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range:Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: User throws 5 kunai that are all connected by strings while expelling a hurricane solar wind from their mouth (looks like and has the same push the user backwards power as Hurricane fist when expelled, however does not have to be directed at the floor. The Blast is powerful enough to lift the user off his feet and send him traveling backwards one range). The solar wind picks up the kunai and causes them to clang together like wind chimes. This noise however, is quite loud, and deafens the opponent, forcing them to hold their hands to their ears in an attempt to drown out the sound.

    Note: Can be used three times per battle.
    ~Approved~ Added usage restriction.
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    Taiyofuuton: Kazaguruma Fan [Solar Wind: Windmill Fan]
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user charges Solar Wind Chakra into a fan or Fan-like object and gives it a wave. From that wave, a burst of Solar wind follows the pattern of the wave
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Approved~
    (Feel free to edit the number of times for approval)
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    ( Meromeroton: Kiukoudai no Kin Tenbin ) Perfume Release: Magnanimous Golden Libra

    Rank: S
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This techniques manifests itself as a nearly instantaneous burst of vaporous golden perfume, stretching radially 10 meters around the user. It is performed without handseals. The premise for this technique is that the chakra system and the physical body are directly linked. This perfume does not affect opponent's whose chakra system or blood system is in the same pace than the user's. If higher than normal, the perfume will emit a genjutsu that will make the opponent feel as if the gravity suddenly increased, pinning them to the ground. The effects are proportional to the chakra system's alteration, thus, when the user moves at a faster pace than normally allowed to the body through the use of chakra (Such as Swift, Gates, Sage Mode or Raikage's Lightning Coat, for example), the pressure of the gravity will bring the person's speed down, invariably making the target as fast as he/she normally is. Due to affecting the body directly, it is able to surpass chakra peaks, like burst of chakra or pain, but is easily released by localized chakra releases (Such as someone infusing chakra into their bodies), otherwise simply calming oneself/releasing the modes will render the genjutsu inactive.
    *The perfume stays in the target's body for 5 turns (As long as Raikage's Coat). Without the perfume, the genjutsu can be released as normal*
    *The user can only use this technique twice per battle, and it requires 2 turns waiting period after the previous perfume disappeared*
    *The user can't preform Forbidden jutsus, nor Perfume higher than A rank, for 2 turns*
    ____________
    -Declined-
    10 meters is a long distance to cover instantaneously so change that, and at least 1 hand seal would be nice.

    ( Masshuru-muton: Kouhi no Ken ) Mushroom Release: Blades of Titania

    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Through use of a higher dose of earth chakra to reinforce the mushrooms, honing the their hardest tissues with water, the user is able to produce blade like structures of liquens, with equivalent hardness of hardest Metals of equal rank and hardest crystal of 1 lower. Liquens are symbiotic structures of fungi and algae, recriated here with water, earth and mushroom chakra. With this jutsu, the user is able to grow linquens from her/his body and spread them into any surface, as long as they're directly in contact. This serves to create sharp blade structures or to lock an opponent into a tight petrified-like coat of liquens. A secondary ability of the liquens is the detection of air toxicity/radiation, allowing the user to utilize the algae part to absorb radiation up to the rank of the technique. Due to a chakra rectriated photosintetic ability, the liquen will prevent sage mode users from acessing natural energy when in contact with the liquens.
    *Can only be used 4 times per battle*
    *Can only be used once every two turns*
    ____________
    -Approved-


    Updating:


    ( Masshuru-muton: Tenshin Onnauma ) Mushroom Release: Centaurides' Zenith
    Rank: B
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user creates up to 5 large arrows (in a row, or in a succession, depending on the archery mastery of the user) made of highly concentrated chakra-enhanced pre-developed yeasts. Instead of a specific type of yeast, they react upon a certain situation and mature based on the need of the user. Contact with enemies will activate the more aggressive type of yeasts, contact with other substances will activate other types of yeast, such as bread or beer yeast, which the user is able to control with chakra. Upon creation, the user is able to shoot them in any direction she wants, with or without the aid of an actual bow (Mostly for the looks, as the arrow will have the same speed nonetheless).
    *The arrow is able to pierce anything a normal arrow is able to)*
    *Can be used only once every 4 turns, and only 3 times per battle*
    *Basically creates an arrow made of chakra infused yeast*

    Approved here
    ( Masshuru-muton: Tenshin Onnauma ) Mushroom Release: Centaurides' Zenith
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:User takes advantage of the specific release of mushroom release to create specific species or types of mushrooms to create a chakra-enhanced pre-developed yeast. This yeast can be produced as normal weapons (Arrows, kunai, shuriken, staffs, swords, etc) that can be thrown at the enemy or like walls, pillars, structures, etc that are created either from existing organic matter (wood, grass, leaves, flesh), water/moist or from the users body.The yeast is manifested as a soft, dense, foam/sponge-like structure, whose color varies from user to user. The yeast mature and react differently according to the substance that touches them, this is more noticeable when exposed bone is pierced or pierces through the yeast structures, as they will infect the bone, culminating in the dissolution of exposed bones (ex: Kaguya) into dust, rendering them mushy, then dry, then desintegrating them. While this would simply mean that a normal person would just be sick and weakly, preventing the usage of high level Taijutsu and bursts of speed, for a Kaguya it would mean the loss of their KG for the duration of the disease. It requires 2 turns after infection for the culmination of the symptoms.
    *Can be used only once every 2 turns, and only 4 times per battle*

    ____________
    -Approved-


    Most was changed and/or reworded, so I bolded all of the description

    (Masshuru-Muton: Chiyu no Ten'on ) Mushroom Style: Bless of Legba
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user is able to release an enhanced form of Peniciline, allowing her to effectively killing most pathogenic Germs and Bacteria, in infections or from

    techniques employed in Germ release, up to A rank. The technique is more efficient if used by a person with medical knowledge, such as a med-nin or a med-school

    Student, able to kill up to S rank of Germ Release.

    Approved here
    (Masshuru-Muton: Chiyu no Ten'on ) Mushroom Style: Bless of Legba
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User is capable of producing multiple strands of enhanced therapeutic fungus that can act as antibiotics and antagonists of infectious agents such as Germ Release, Nano bugs, etc. It's up to the user's own mastery to balance the aggressiveness of the jutsu, being so that the user is able to range from fungus able to clean several branches of bacteria and germs to actual nano-bugs and even develop heavy allergic reactions on the patient/opponent's skin and body. These battle-oriented strands' effect range from simple redness and boils (similar to a 2nd/3rd degree burn) to actual necrosis of the touched area, varying with the time the user stays infected (3 turns for max effect). The symptoms start to occur a few moments after contact and progress rapidly. The technique is more efficient if used by a person with medical knowledge, such as a med-nin or a med-school Student, able to kill up to techniques up to S rank or generally work faster (Aggressive strands are cut down 1 turn to achieve max effects.). The strands are deployed through direct physical contact with the enemy. The user focuses his chakra through his skin in order to cover it with the desired fungus, either completely or in a specific spot. By doing this, the users skin in that spot gains a slight coloration unique to each user of Mushroom release.
    *Activation lasts 2 turns and has a 2 turn cold down once it wears off*

    ____________
    -Approved-
    Just add if the user needs to touch this new fungus or just inhale spores or whatever.

    (Mashuru-muton: Kora no Shukun Hae ) Mushroom Release: Children of Beelzebub
    Rank: B
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases a mist of black spores, which, upon contact or when desired, will grow into dark fungus, with the exact same characteristics as the Main Release fungus, but differing in color. As soon as it is released, the mist will aggregate into clones, the size of the mist being proportional to the amount of clones created. The clones, although tangible and similar to the user in shape, are simply an aggregation of spores, and as such may not use any techniques apart from Mushroom Jutsus up to B rank. But they are light and fast, and can desegregate, assuming an hybrid mist/clone form. The mist will shift is such way that it will seem like a swarm of flies, despite not being able to spread much more that 1 meter from the originating clone.
    *Like any clone technique, this jutsu creates up to 4 clones*
    *Clone restrictions apply to this jutsu*

    Approved here
    (Mashuru-muton: Kora no Shukun Hae ) Mushroom Release: Children of Beelzebub

    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases a mist of black spores, which, upon contact or when desired, will grow into dark fungus, with the exact same characteristics as the Main Release fungus, but differing in color. As soon as it is released, the mist will aggregate into clones, the size of the mist being proportional to the amount of clones created. The clones, although tangible and similar to the user in shape, are simply an aggregation of spores, and as such may not use any techniques apart from Mushroom Jutsus. But they are light and fast, and can desegregate, assuming an hybrid mist/clone form. The mist will shift is such way that it will seem like a swarm of flies, despite not being able to spread much more that 1 meter from the originating clone.
    *Can use every Mushroom Technique but they loose 1 rank in strength, likewise, the weakened Fields of Wonderland only count as 1 jutsu.
    *Like any clone technique, this jutsu creates up to 4 clones*
    *Clone restrictions apply to this jutsu*
    ____________
    -Approved-


    (Masshuru-muton: Chibi no Baundo ) Mushroom Style: Bouncy Leprechauns
    Rank: C
    Rank: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Allows the user to grow up to 5 large wide-topped mushrooms from the ground, that can bounce the user and/or the opponent high in the air, or withstand the impact from high falls.

    Approved here
    (Masshuru-muton: Chibi no Baundo ) Mushroom Style: Bouncy Leprechauns

    Type: Supplementary/Defense
    Rank: A
    Rank: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Allows the user to grow up to 5 large wide-topped mushrooms from the ground or in a specific part of his body. These mushrooms take the inherited strength of the element against blunt power and enhance it further. The top of the mushrooms allow them to absorb the impact/bluntness/momentum of the technique/person and then push it back. This is most useful when breaking falls or against blunt techniques (Solid Elements, Taijutsu, etc) which are sent back with half the initial power (A-Rank becomes a B-Rank, etc) within reason. Instead of 5 mushrooms, the user is able to create only one, it's power more focused allows to deflect up to one S rank technique following the same principles and strengths of the CE.
    *Requires a cool down of 1 turn between usages*

    ____________
    -Declined-
    I'm not fond of the idea of a mushroom armor that can stop even S rank attacks.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

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    Re-Submissions:

    7) (Hisuiton: Feizingu no Jutsu) – Jade Release: Phasing Technique
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will focus their chakra throughout their entire body, activating this Technique. This allows the User to Phase though any Jade source on the field. While in the Jade, the user can travel at accelerated speed, allowing for a fast method of attack or escape, however the user is unable to use any Jutsu's while phased within Jade.
    Note:
    -Must know Jade Release
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ~Declined~ This went from being similar to hidden in rocks technique to dance of the ferns technique in which you can travel at fast speeds. You really need to clarify exactly how fast you're traveling. Keep in mind, I will not be accepting the kaguya's traveling speed when they use Dance of the ferns.

    Updating/Re-wording the fallowing technique:



    (Hisuiton: Hisui Nedsi) - Jade Release: Jade Spike Pit
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user makes 6 handseals while focusing their chakra under their opponent, the ground will then turn to Jade as it implode's forming a huge round crater under the opponent. Spikes will then rise out of the Pit impaling the opponent. The size of the crater is dependent on the amount of chakra used. It can be anything from a small pit to something capable on holding a large summon. If the user is withing range of the pit, they will need to defend from the technique as well.
    Note:
    -Can only be used twice per battle
    -Must know Jade Release
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ~Approved~
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    8) (Hisuiton: Ro-yaru Keibi) - Jade Release: Royal Guard Monarchs
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40 (-10 per turn)
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user will focus their chakra around them while making 5 handseals. This creates 3 large Jade Monarchs known as the Royal Guard. These Monarchs are twice the size of an normal man standing at 11ft. the left arm is shaped like a club, which is used to smash close by opponents and the right arm is shaped like a long Blade, used to impale or slice close by opponents. In order to kill these Monarchs, the opponent must completely destroy them for if their is an source of Jade close by, they can simply regrow and reform back into their original state. The Royal Guard have the ability to use "Jade Realease: Greater Jade Technique" which allows them to attack the opponent at a distance. Because of the constant strand of chakra the user is unable to use any Jade while these Monarchs are in play.
    Note:
    -Must know Jade Release
    -Can only be used once per battle
    -Regrowing counts as a move
    -"Greater Jade Technique" counts as a move
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ~Declined~ Reduce the number of Monarchs to one.

    9) (Hisuiton: Senbon Toma) - Jade Release: Needle Sphere
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will slam there hands together focusing their chakra around their opponent. 2 Basketball sized spheres of jade will erupt from the ground like cannonballs under the opponent. These balls will rise in the air and explode with extreme force, releaseing countless jade Senbon which will rain down in all directions, covering a Mid Range area. if the user is in the radius of the attack, they will need to defend from it as well.
    Note:
    -Must know Jade Release
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ~Declined~ Clarify "countless"
    Re-Submissions:

    6) (Hisuiton: Feizingu no Jutsu) – Jade Release: Phasing Technique
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will focus their chakra throughout their entire body, activating this Technique. This allows the User to Phase though any Jade source on the field. While in the Jade, the user can travel at the speed of a common running ninja, allowing for a fast method of attack or escape, however the user is unable to use any Jutsu's while phased within Jade.
    Note:
    -Must know Jade Release
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ~Approved~ Edited the color'd, if you are not satisfied feel free to drop me a PM/VM and I will change my verdict.
    I'm not sure how fast the Kaguya's traveling speed when they use Dance of the ferns, I'm totally content with not moving as fast as it.
    As I'm not sure how fast to add, I'll message you before finishing this Jutsu


    7) (Hisuiton: Ro-yaru Keibi) - Jade Release: Royal Guard Monarch
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40 (-10 per turn)
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user will focus their chakra around them while making 5 handseals. This creates one large Jade Monarch known as the Royal Guard. This Monarch is twice the size of an normal man standing at 11ft. the left arm is shaped like a club, which is used to smash close by opponents and the right arm is shaped like a long Blade, used to impale or slice close by opponents. In order to kill this Monarch, the opponent must completely destroy it for if their is an source of Jade close by, it can simply regrow and reform back into it's original state. The Royal Guard has the ability to use "Jade Realease: Greater Jade Technique" which allows them to attack the opponent at a distance. Because of the constant strand of chakra the user is unable to use any Jade while this Monarch is in play.
    Note:
    -Must know Jade Release
    -Can only be used once per battle
    -Regrowing counts as a move
    -"Greater Jade Technique" counts as a move
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ~Approved~
    I had 3 because this was originality going to be Jade Clones but since clones have been done some many times before, I decided to come up with something else, that's why I came up with Monarchs instead..

    8) (Hisuiton: Senbon Toma) - Jade Release: Needle Sphere
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will slam there hands together focusing their chakra around their opponent. 2 Basketball sized spheres of jade will erupt from the ground like cannonballs under the opponent. These balls will rise in the air and explode with extreme force, releasing 100 jade Senbon (50 per sphere) which will rain down in all directions, covering a Mid Range area. if the user is in the radius of the attack, they will need to defend from it as well.
    Note:
    -Must know Jade Release
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ~Approved~
    Well, if you have a bundle of Senbon the equals the mass of a basketball, it will be around 50, and since their are 2 basketball sized Jade Spheres, that makes it a total of 100 senbon..
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    (karumera Bodi) - Caramel Body
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary - Defense
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This technique allows the user to turn the whole body to caramel at will, this technique makes it impossible to receive damage from physical attacks. From a single hair to the skin and muscles, everything can be turned to caramel and solidified at will. Be it to evade an enemy's attack during a short range battle, to infiltrate a structure, or to launch a surprise attack in a caramel state, this technique boasts a high strategic value. Using this, the user can also re-shape their body parts for suitable situations. As this technique turns the body into caramel, the user is vulnerable to fire techniques. Like the Hozuki clan members can fuse with water in this form and blend in, caramel users can do the same with caramel.

    Note: Can be activated any time but only lasts for 5 turns
    Note: Can only be used twice
    Note: In this form, the user can't use lightning or fire jutsu.
    ~Declined do not resubmit~ As you yourself mentioned, this is plainly a hydrofication technique ripoff.

    this is just a caramel version of the Hozuki clan jutsu, so didn't see it needing any restrictions as Hozuki doesn't need any either.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    (Shindou : Totsunyuumoui) - Vibration Release : Rushing Fury
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user molds his Vibration Release chakra into the air surrounding the enemy and four barely visible furiously spinning sphere-like balls, much like Sonic Hedgehog if you seen him. Each ball is short-range in front, on the left, on the right and to the target's back. With the user's pre-set directions, they will speed towards where they were set. Despite being a sphere-like shape, it should not be taken lightly due to it's sharp property from spinning extremely fast, capable of shredding human flesh and bones. The user is also capable of setting these balls of pure extreme vibrations on fire by increasing the speed rate they go at, giving them the burning property to go though it would be more visible to people now. This does not give it a boost in strength though, just the capability to burn now. The fire is not chakra-formed but made by the extreme friction in air just like Morning Peacock.

    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : Cooldown period of a turn before second usage
    Note : The user can reduce the number of spheres that appear
    Note : No Vibration techniques higher than S-rank may be used in the same turn
    Note : With hand gestures, the user can manipulate a change in direction if needed, counts as a technique use
    ~Declined~ So where are all the real restrictions? All I see is a very powerful S-Ranked technique that is created in short range of your target. I'd like you to specify exactly how far away meter wise, the spheres can be created. The reason I'm asking this is because short range can vary from around 2-5 meters. Keep in mind that if you do keep it in that short of a distance I will ask you that you decrease the range of the technique itself from long to medium.
    (Shindou : Zokunenjuju) - Vibration Release : Unholy Gathering
    Rank : A
    Type : Offensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 30
    Damage points : 60
    Description : The user molds his Vibration Release chakra into the ears of the opponent that brings in natural vibrations from the surroundings and enhances those vibration to be louder than normal. Even the enemy will hear his own heart beat slightly, which just shows how powerful this technique can be although, this technique isn't capable of killing an enemy and doesn't enhance the target's ability to hear like Inner Sonar Skill as the sounds the targe will hear, will be overpowering. The target will be forced to place his hands onto his ears and fall onto his knees due to the sheer pain he faces. Though, this technique doesn't last long and only for a minute usually. After the technique ends, target suffers from a minor headache and the incapability to hear properly, making earth techniques that cause sounds much more effective.

    Note : Lasts for a minute
    Note : Can only be used twice per battle
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Technique is incapable of killing target used on
    Note : Targets with techniques that are similar to Inner Sonar Skill activated will fall unconscious against this technique
    __________________________

    ~Declined~ You can't predict what the opponent will do when going through that pain. For example, if the opponent has a mode currently activated that allows him to ignore pain, he wouldn't fall on the ground. You understand? If I approve this, you will be allowed to forcefully tell the person you are fighting that he falls on his knees, etc etc. Include a note that states you can't perform any other techniques while this is active. The reason being is that you are currently focusing on vibrating your chakra for that entire minute. As for the highlighted note, that is a contradiction.

    Quote Originally Posted by -Yusuke- View Post
    (Tsukene : Sawakaibutsu) - Root Release : Swamp Monster
    Type : Offensive / Defensive / Supplementary
    Rank : Forbidden
    Range : Short
    Chakra cost : 50
    Damage points : N/A (-20 to self)
    Description : The user makes a row of five handseals and ends with the forming of a clap. Right after the clap is made, thousands of roots will start erupting from the ground, some of which are naturally from the ground and some materialized using Root Release chakra. Much of an advanced version of, 'Root Release : Cocoon', this creates a huge figure known to be a monster in the minds of child. This creature is equipped with an earthen lid as a mask, the level of B-rank, and behind the mask is where the user is, inside the roots. During the period the user is within the creature, he may not perform any other techniques till it is either destroyed or released. While inside, the user is able to control the monster's movements. Just like 'Root Release : Cocoon', this creature is able to releasing root-like bullets that are much larger than the weaker version and is on the level of A-rank. Other than that, this monster can regenerate roots at places which have been hit and damaged if the attack used is weak and is given a bit of time. The only way of destroying the monster is by having it destroyed as a whole or accurately pierce through the mask, roots and hit the user. Once per battle, the swamp monster is capable of releasing pressurized water leveling an S-rank technique, to a targeted direction but this can only be used the two turns after activation since the water has to be collected from underground and pressurized within the swamp creature first.

    Note : Can only be used once per battle
    Note : Lasts for five of the user's turn
    Note : The user will take 20 damage activating this
    Note : User must sacrifice 10 chakra points every turn to maintain this
    Note : Able of regenerating destroyed areas if given the least bit of time
    Note : Capable of being destroyed as a whole or killing the user within it
    Note : User cannot perform any other techniques apart from Root Release while this technique is active

    Looks like this :

    ___________
    -Approved-
    The thing is my Swamp Monster can only perform Root Release while active so I find it extremely cope since I can only have 12 Root Techniques, I wouldn't want to be spamming the same offensive technique over and over again. <_< I hope you accept the bolded.

    Resubmit :

    (Tsukene : Sawakaibutsu) - Root Release : Swamp Monster
    Type : Offensive / Defensive / Supplementary
    Rank : Forbidden
    Range : Short
    Chakra cost : 50
    Damage points : N/A (-20 to self)
    Description : The user makes a row of five handseals and ends with the forming of a clap. Right after the clap is made, thousands of roots will start erupting from the ground, some of which are naturally from the ground and some materialized using Root Release chakra. Much of an advanced version of, 'Root Release : Cocoon', this creates a huge figure known to be a monster in the minds of child. This creature is equipped with an earthen lid as a mask, the level of B-rank, and behind the mask is where the user is, inside the roots. During the period the user is within the creature, he may not perform any other techniques till it is either destroyed or released. While inside, the user is able to control the monster's movements. Just like 'Root Release : Cocoon', this creature is able to releasing root-like bullets that are much larger than the weaker version and is on the level of A-rank. Other than that, this monster can regenerate roots at places which have been hit and damaged if the attack used is weak and is given a bit of time. The only way of destroying the monster is by having it destroyed as a whole or accurately pierce through the mask, roots and hit the user. Twice per battle, the swamp monster is capable of releasing pressurized water leveling an S-rank technique, to a targeted direction but this can only be used the turn after activation since the water has to be collected from underground and pressurized within the swamp creature first.

    Note : Can only be used once per battle
    Note : Lasts for five of the user's turn
    Note : The user will take 20 damage activating this
    Note : User must sacrifice 10 chakra points every turn to maintain this
    Note : Able of regenerating destroyed areas if given the least bit of time
    Note : Capable of being destroyed as a whole or killing the user within it
    Note : While using this technique, the user may only use Root, Earth and Water Release techniques
    ~Declined~ I wouldn't have approved the first version if I had checked it myself. If you want a chance at approval you are going to have to highly restrict this technique. It is, after all a Forbidden ranked.
    Looks like this :
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    (Purasuchikkuton : Purasuchikku no jutsu) - Plastic Release : Plastic Style Technique
    Rank : B
    Type : Offensive / Defensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 20
    Damage points : 40
    Description : This technique allows the user to materialize plastic out of the user's hands, ground or pre-existing sources of plastic and turn them into a desired shape. This technique is just as versatile as the Wood Style Technique (pillars, hammers, cushioning, etc) and the elasticity, texture and strength of the plastic depends on the creation of the user.
    ~Declined~ Remove the word "Materialize" to create the plastic. You need gather certain (petroleum) minerals and (Natural)gasses. If you'd like you can change, hands to spewing out of your mouth like earth style. As for the ground and pre-existing sources simply mention that they rise from it not materialize.
    (Purasuchikkuton/Katon : Nenshou Yuudoku) - Plastic/Fire Release : Burning Toxic
    Rank : A
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Mid - Long (Optional : Short)
    Chakra cost : 30
    Damage points : 60
    Description : The user performs a single handseal while channeling his fire chakra into a pre-existing source of plastic up to a certain degree that allows the fire chakra to melt the plastic, burning whoever or whatever is touching the plastic. The main purpose of this technique is to release a toxic gas because naturally, plastic produces dioxins which are poisonous. The gas will only be able to travel a short-range radius around the source of burning plastic before the concentration of dioxin in the air is too spread out in the environment. Whoever has inhaled the poisonous gas will suffer death two turns after inhalation unless treated before then.
    Note : Can only be used two times per battle
    Note : No Plastic techniques higher than A-rank may be used in the same turn
    ~Approved~ Edited the color'd, if you are not satisfied feel free to drop me a VM/PM and I will change my verdict.
    (Purasuchikkuton : Eisoreroppou) - Plastic Release : Wrap It Up
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive / Defensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user holds his hands out towards the front as though pushing something and as he does that, he materializes a huge wall of firm yet elastic sheet of plastic in front of him. The size of the wall depends on the makings of the user. The user pulls his arms back and pushes it back to the front, sending the wall of plastic towards the directed motion. At the user's command, he can bend the plastic to whatever shape he like and if saying, theres a water ball heading towards the plastic wall, the user can wrap the plastic around the water technique, containing the water within a plastic ball that still continues its travel towards wherever the user intended to send the plastic wall towards. The same can be done for lightning as plastic insulates lightning, not allowing it to escape and the other elemental weaknesses of Plastic, additionally with elements that aren't stated but can obviously be affected by this techniques.
    Note : No Plastic techniques in the same turn
    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : Secondary effect of technique counts as a turn to the three jutsu rule
    ~Declined~ Where are the rest of the restrictions? Change materialize to rising out of the ground as I stated before. Also I'd like you to clarify exactly how big the wall can be. As it stands with that vague description, you could make it as big as three rashōmon gates which is unacceptable.
    (Purasuchikkuton : Gangurando) - Plastic Release : Toy Land
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive / Defensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user slams both hands onto the ground, sending an outward burst of Plastic chakra through the ground. The user molds the chakra to summon plastic that covers the entire field, while at the same time, the technique turns slightly part of the earth just beneath the surface of the ground into plastic. As this is done, the user raises his hands into the ground, to make five plastic creatures of the user's creation. Be it a huge teddy bear or a small white tiger. All of it possess the same strength that can lift up houses. These creature may bear plastic weapons with them such as swords, spears, etc. The plastic on the ground can be further used for other Plastic techniques that may be used in the future.
    Note : May only be used once per battle
    Note : This technique counts as two techniques towards the three jutsu rule
    Note : Plastic creatures may be released at the user's command
    Note : Plastic creatures last only for four of the user's turn before falling apart
    Note : No Plastic techniques higher than S-rank to be used in the same turn or the turn after
    ~Declined~ Reduce the number of creatures being created, their strength and compare the sizes that can be created to narutoverse context. And please don't sugar coat the technique with useless restrictions like the last one you placed. If you want this to be approved you are going to have to add some real restrictions and a turn limit for the duration of this field.


    (Purasuchikkuton : Setsunaihebi) - Plastic Release : Suffocating Snake
    Rank : A
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 30
    Damage points : 60
    Description : The user molds the Plastic chakra into the air surrounding the enemy and materialize some sort of white plastic bag which covers the enemy' head much like the picture in the spoiler below. With shape manipulation, the user turns the whole plastic bag into a snake. The snake's head will be where the opening of the plastic bag which will be around the neck, basically meaning the opening is its mouth. The snake grips its teeth into the neck securely, suffocating the target and causing him or her pain in the process. Even when the plastic bag was summoned, it was already securely tightened around the target's neck and can't be removed through regular means such as using the hands and pulling it off or else that would really just kill the purpose of this technique.

    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : The snake lasts for 3 of the user's turns if not dealt with
    Note : If snake were to be removed and not destroyed through some means, the user can still control it to yet again attempt to suffocate the target
    ~Declined~ Already spoke about materialization a few times above.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    ( Geruton 主 Hō no Hoīru Mawashi ) - Gel Release 主 Turning Wheel of Dharma
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    The user of this technique slams his palms together. This causes the floor of the battlefield in a large circle to turn into gel, extending up to long-range. Once it forms, the viscous gel wheel begins rotating at high speeds. The user remains unaffected by the movement and remains capable of moving normally, however the opponent begins sinking into the adhesive gel and is thoroughly destabilized by the spinning motion, leaving him unable to move around. Once the wheel has formed, the user can use it to create one large spiked pillar of gel from any one point in the gel battlefield. The pillar is thick enough to hide a human behind it but is only as tall as a human.
    Note: This technique may be used only twice per battle.
    Note: Only one pillar can be created per turn of the user.
    Note: The user cannot cast any S-rank or above Gel techniques for the same and following turn.
    Note: Although the user can move normally, he is incapable of moving at higher speeds than normal.
    Note: Neither the user nor the opponent will be able to control the earth for as long as the gel wheel is in play, as the gel is impermeable to chakra and chakra cannot be sent through it to move the ground or minerals.
    Note: As gel is capable of being formed by any solid substance, this technique works even if the floor of the battlefield is covered with some other solid substance than earth.
    ____________
    -Pending-
    You need to define how large the circle is.

    ( Geruton/Raiton 主 Ishiki no Kongō ) - Gel Release/Lightning Release 主 Vajra of Consciousness
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    The user of this technique holds out his hand, palm open. A vajra shaped purely of aerogel forms instantly floating above his palm. With a flick of his wrist, the user can then send the vajra flying at a target in a straight line. The vajra is composed of dense aerogel with a core of lightning held within it. Upon nearing its target, or on the user's command, the lightning bursts out of the end of the vajra forming a sort of explosive warhead on the tip of the vajra that causes it to detonate violently. The superheated explosion then causes the superheated aerogel-turned-glass shards scattering forward and to the sides to shred.
    Note: This technique may be used only once every other turn.
    Note: If there is a gel source on the battlefield, the vajra can be formed from any part of that.
    Note: The vajra is capable of moving only in a straight line, and its shards technique is only works on targets within a few metres of the explosion.
    Note: The explosion is strong enough to breach any walls, as it is focused in a single cone. However, this aspect makes it easy to dodge the explosion by moving even a few metres away from the vajra.
    Note: The speed of the vajra renders it trackable only to doujutsu. However, any person can dodge the vajra by getting out of the way quickly if they recognize the threat.
    ____________
    -Pending-
    "any walls" is kind of a bad description, since there are sealed walls which are genuinely unbreakable; also, you can't say the speed can be tracked only by doujutse, and then say the opponent can move out of the way if he or she notices the threat - they wont notice it if it's so fast it can only be tracked by doujutsu.

    ( Geruton 主 Seifuku Hasu ) - Gel Release 主 Subjugation Lotus
    Rank: A
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    A very simple technique. The user stamps the ground or claps his hand, and instantly an inverted lotus shape of gel forms at some point. The lotus can be formed around the user as a defense, or around a target to trap them. With one handseal, the user can make the lotus disperse harmlessly into gel.
    Note: This lotus is large enough to hold two people comfortably within it.
    Note: The lotus forms very rapidly around a target, within a second. However, it does absolutely no damage, and furthermore reduces the chances of further strikes by the user as it also acts as a 'defense' protecting the opponent from all coming from outside.
    Note: The lotus can be made either of aerogel or aquagel depending on the user's preference.
    ____________
    -Approved-


    ( Geruton 主 Tomi Yutakana Hōseki ) - Gel Release 主 Wealth Enriching Jewel
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 15 (+10 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    The user makes four handseals, and touches his forehead. A glistening crown of gel appears on his brow. Henceforth, any gel on the battlefield regenerates if damaged or 'sheds' any burnt part and regenerates as the crown releases pulses of chakra continually.
    Note: This technique cannot bring together scattered pieces of gel, such as from an explosion, to form back the original shape.
    Note: While this technique is in play, the user cannot cast any S-rank and above Gel techniques the same turn it is activated, or any Forbidden-rank gel techniques the rest of the battle.
    ____________
    -Pending-
    Too low level and undefined duration of the tech.

    ( Geruton 主 Kongō no Keisei Nadameru ) - Gel Release 主 Pacifying Vajra Formation
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50 (+10 per turn)
    Damage Points: 45 ( per vajra )
    The user places his hands in a praying position. Behind him, eight vajras made of gel appear and float in the air, arraying themselves in a semicircle. Unlike the basic technique that forms a single vajra, these vajras are made exclusively of gel without any lightning core, and cannot explode as such. However, they are denser than the basic vajra and travel at twice the speed. With a mental command, the user can make the vajra shoot forward to strike the target. If the vajra misses, it can be brought back to array itself in the formation again to strike later. If it is blocked and damaged, it dissipates into a puddle of gel.
    Note: This technique may be activated only once per battle.
    Note: The user cannot use S-rank techniques of gel for the same turn and next turn or use Forbidden-rank techniques of gel for the rest of the battle.
    Note: Each turn, only a maximum of two vajras can be sent at a target. They move in a straight line.
    ____________
    -Pending-
    Forbidden means you should be taking damage as well, and there's already a speed problem with the single vajra, so let's wait with this until the single one is resolved.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    Kansou Houmen: Nenshou Shinkirou | Arid Release: The Burning Mirage
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 35
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    The user will preform one handseal and increase the heat of the air in the field to a high extend. By doing this the air begins to look wavy. When the target looks at the user they looked distorted to the target by the heat waves. These waves are manipulated to where the target feels like he's looking at a mirage of the user. During this time the user can make a sneak attack on the target while the he believes he's attacking the user even though it is viewed as a distorted image of the user. The target will believe he's under a Genjutsu.

    Notes:
    - Only usable 3 times per battle
    - Lasts 2 turns
    - Can't use another Arid Release in the same turn
    - Only usable by Coyote
    ~Declined~ You can't predict what the opponent will believe. As for the restrictions, reduce the times it can be used, taking into account it lasts more than one turn. Lastly, fix the chakra points.
     
         
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    [Arumiton: Koudo Senjigusuri] - Aluminum Release: Earth Infusion
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This is an advanced aluminum technique purely used for further enhancing the physical power of earth based techniques, right after the usage of any earth technique the user simultaneously releases a large amount of aluminum chakra into the earth technique he made turning the external earth features into aluminum metal that greatly increases the physical capabilities of the standard earth based techniques gaining greater power, however the earth technique that's turn into aluminum doesn't increase in size whatsoever.
    ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~All earth based techniques enhanced by this gain +20 additional damage points.
    ___________
    -Declined-
    You need to define to what degree it enhances the earth tech
    (Arumiton: Koudo Senjigusuri) - Aluminum Release: Earth Infusion
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This is an advanced aluminum technique purely used for further enhancing the physical power of earth based techniques, right after the usage of any earth technique the user simultaneously releases a large amount of aluminum chakra into the earth technique he made turning a portion of the earth into aluminum metal that greatly increases the physical capabilities of the standard earth based techniques gaining greater impact power, however the earth technique that's turn into aluminum doesn't increase in size whatsoever, The earth technique infused with this becomes harder due to the layer of the aluminum covering it, also getting a resistance towards lightning techniques, due to the Aluminum release's strength towards lightning, however once the Aluminum layer that a portion of the earth technique turned into is broken through, the earth loses it's resistance to lightning attacks.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: All earth based techniques enhanced by this gain +20 additional damage.
    ~Declined~ Do not resubmit.
    (Arumiton: Kasui Rasentama) - Aluminum Release: Spiked Spiraling Ball
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90 [-30 to the user's hand]
    Description: This technique takes use of very accurate chakra manipulation, similar to the Rasengan in the principal or chakra rotation, initially the user concentrated a Large amount of Aluminum chakra into one of his palms, creating a gigantic spiraling ball that's on the same size of the Cho Odama Rasengan in Sage Mode, the outer layer of the ball sprout multiple spikes of Aluminum connected to the ball which when in contact with an object it cuts through it with the immense rotation speeds that the ball is spinning at, this ball has a hot Aluminum liquid core inside, which when coming in contact with someone the liquid Aluminum burst outwards covering the spikes of the outer layer of the ball and melting anything that comes in contact with it due to the very hot boiling point of the Aluminum liquid which is hotter than the most hottest forms of Lava, this technique can also be used as a defense by throwing the ball near the user, creating a Large Aluminum spiked wall which can be used to defend against incoming attacks, due to the hot Aluminum core in which the ball has burns the user's hand severely.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: No Aluminum techniques for the next 2 turns.
    Note: After the usage of this technique the user's speed drastically decreases for the next 2 turns, however he is able to perform handseals just as normal.
    Note: No Aluminum techniques in the same turn.
    ~Declined~ So tell me how exactly how are you not hurting your entire body while holding such a ball with spikes spiraling around? Yes you did include damage to the hand but I don't think that's what you were referring to. As for the rest well, you need to tone it down and include some real restrictions. As it stands, all I see are restrictions for a strong S-Ranked technique. However on re-submission, be mindful on the description because it can be classified as a rasengan variant which are strictly forbidden.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

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    SakuzenHyouton (Dry Ice Release)


    (SakuzenHyouton: SakuzenHyouton Kage Bunshin) Dry Ice Release: Dry Ice Release Shadow Clone
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user creates a Shadow Clone that is infused with Dry Ice chakra. When it's hit it returns to a Dry Ice statue state that crumbles and releases a vast amount of Dry Ice Fog while crumbling. It can use any regular techniques the user can. Can only use Dry Ice techniques as its elemental ninjutsu techs.
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    -Declined- First you say it can you any regular tech you can, then you say it can use only Dry Ice techs, decide
    What I meant was it can use any non-elemental ninjutsu I can use, but as for its elemental ones it can only use Dry Ice Customs but I will edit it.....my CE needs some techs

    (SakuzenHyouton: SakuzenHyouton Kage Bunshin) Dry Ice Release: Dry Ice Release Shadow Clone
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user creates a Shadow Clone that is infused with Dry Ice chakra. When it's hit it returns to a Dry Ice statue state that crumbles and releases a vast amount of Dry Ice Fog/Gas of Co2 while crumbling.
    Note: This clone is capable of using only Dry Ice techniques the creator knows.
    Note: The fog/gas of Co2 that is released when it is crumbling can suffocate the opponent if they remain in its vacinity.
    ~Declined~ How far range wise does the gas/fog disperse? Also I'd like you to clarify exactly how many turns does it take for the opponent to suffocate while inside the gas/fog.
    Quote Originally Posted by Zanji
    (SakuzenHyouton: Ryuuenmu Tama no jutsu) Dry Ice Release: Fog Dragon Bullet Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user shoots their hand forward and an inch from the users palm erupts this mass quantity of Dry Ice fog. The Fog immediately takes the shape of a dragons head and blast towards the opponent.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times
    ____________
    -Declined- And what does the fog actually do? Just scare the opponent?
    The fog/gas of Dry Ice is highly dangerous to a human being that inhales it because they are incapable of breathing, due to the Co2 of the Dry Ice forcefully replacing any sort of oxygen in the area thus suffocates the person who inhales it.

    (SakuzenHyouton: Ryuuenmu Tama no jutsu) Dry Ice Release: Fog Dragon Bullet Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user shoots their hand forward and an inch from the users palm erupts this mass quantity of Dry Ice fog, with shards of Dry Ice inside the fog. The Fog immediately takes the shape of a dragons head and blast towards the opponent. With the Fog rushing at the opponent it makes it hard for the opponent to see or breath while inside the fog due to there being no oxygen, along with getting pelted by Dry Ice shards.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times
    Note: The Fog is capable of suffocating the opponent if they stay within the fog for too long.
    ~Declined~ Same as above.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

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    (Rubiton- Rubi Kangoku) Ruby release- Ruby Prison
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: n/a
    Description: the user will gather his ruby chakra into the ground around the opponent and raise a dozen ruby pillars to imprison them.
    *Note: can only be used 3x per battle.
    ____________
    -Approved-
    **Im updating this jutsu and re-submitting...

    (Rubiton- Ōkina Rubī Tekunikku) Ruby release- Greater Ruby Technique
    Type: Attack/ Defense/ Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: the user will gather his ruby chakra into the ground and use it to raise multiple ruby pillars, structures , or mold it to cover areas w/ ruby in order to attack or defend. The areas intended to be covered by ruby cannot be any larger than short range radius.
    *Note: can only be used 3x per battle.

    ~Declined~ This isn't an update but a new technique that resembles "Doton no jutsu" sort of speak.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

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    ( Meromeroton: Kiukoudai no Kin Tenbin ) Perfume Release: Magnanimous Golden Libra

    Rank: S
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This techniques manifests itself as a nearly instantaneous burst of vaporous golden perfume, stretching radially 10 meters around the user. It is performed without handseals. The premise for this technique is that the chakra system and the physical body are directly linked. This perfume does not affect opponent's whose chakra system or blood system is in the same pace than the user's. If higher than normal, the perfume will emit a genjutsu that will make the opponent feel as if the gravity suddenly increased, pinning them to the ground. The effects are proportional to the chakra system's alteration, thus, when the user moves at a faster pace than normally allowed to the body through the use of chakra (Such as Swift, Gates, Sage Mode or Raikage's Lightning Coat, for example), the pressure of the gravity will bring the person's speed down, invariably making the target as fast as he/she normally is. Due to affecting the body directly, it is able to surpass chakra peaks, like burst of chakra or pain, but is easily released by localized chakra releases (Such as someone infusing chakra into their bodies), otherwise simply calming oneself/releasing the modes will render the genjutsu inactive.
    *The perfume stays in the target's body for 5 turns (As long as Raikage's Coat). Without the perfume, the genjutsu can be released as normal*
    *The user can only use this technique twice per battle, and it requires 2 turns waiting period after the previous perfume disappeared*
    *The user can't preform Forbidden jutsus, nor Perfume higher than A rank, for 2 turns*
    ~Declined~ Reword the nearly instantaneous part and include hand signs.
    Mathias initial edit
    Quote Originally Posted by Lili-Chwan View Post
    ____________
    -Declined-
    10 meters is a long distance to cover instantaneously so change that, and at least 1 hand seal would be nice.
    Nexus final edit

    ( Meromeroton: Kiukoudai no Kin Tenbin ) Perfume Release: Magnanimous Golden Libra

    Rank: S
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This techniques manifests itself as a quick burst of vaporous golden perfume, stretching radially 10 meters around the user in under a couple of seconds. The premise for this technique is that the chakra system and the physical body are directly linked. This perfume does not affect opponent's whose chakra system or blood system is in the same pace than the user's. If higher than normal, the perfume will emit a genjutsu that will make the opponent feel as if the gravity suddenly increased, pinning them to the ground. The effects are proportional to the chakra system's alteration, thus, when the user moves at a faster pace than normally allowed to the body through the use of chakra (Such as Swift, Gates, Sage Mode or Raikage's Lightning Coat, for example), the pressure of the gravity will bring the person's speed down, invariably making the target as fast as he/she normally is. Due to affecting the body directly, it is able to surpass chakra peaks, like burst of chakra or pain, but is easily released by localized chakra releases (Such as someone infusing chakra into their bodies), otherwise simply calming oneself/releasing the modes will render the genjutsu inactive.
    *The perfume stays in the target's body for 5 turns (As long as Raikage's Coat). Without the perfume, the genjutsu can be released as normal*
    *The user can only use this technique twice per battle, and it requires 2 turns waiting period after the previous perfume disappeared*
    *The user can't preform Forbidden jutsus, nor Perfume higher than A rank, for 2 turns after the perfume is activated*

    Note: If it's not approvable as it is, considering it doesn't have handseals (I'll explain my reasoning, please consider the following restriction:

    *The user must preform 1 handseal prior, having the technique laying dormant to be activated whenever the need arises, without handseals*
    ~Declined~ There is no need for an explanation, I understand perfectly fine why you would rather not have hand seals when activating the technique on the spot. But that's what makes this technique that deadly. So I will ask you kindly, once again for the last time to include hand seals.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    Purton| Kesshououja - [Plasma Release | Plasma Monarch]
    Rank: A - Forbidden
    Type: Attack/Defensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid [(Long) S-Forbidden Rank]
    Chakra: 30/40/50 (+5-15 chakra depending on rank per turn)
    Damage: 60/80/100
    Description: Kesshououja is a advanced plasma jutsu activated by utilizing up to nine seals (Dog - Tiger - Horse -Dragon- Monkey - Dragon - Horse -Tiger - Dog). When activated the users body becoming can become a intangible plasma body that can extend it's limbs and send waves of plasma at the opponent(s) at this boint the users eyes burn a fiery white. Since the user body is now made of plasma they are able to control all of the plasma at will and because of this the opponent can't get close to the user or else face being burned alive by the sheer magnitude of heat. When the user adds the Boar Seal to the jutsu his body begins to expand allowing more plasma to flow and increasing the range of the jutsu he is able to also shoot fiery white blast of pure heat at the opponent 3 up to three times his body then burns with the fiery white chakra. If the opponent adds both the Boar and the Tiger Seal his skin will turn blue and his eyes white out as a fiery white aura of fire emanates around him, At this point the user as become one with the plasma element and can only use it as well as the fire and plasma elements. At this point the user has access to jutsu exclusive to this form as well as all the abilities of the other two forms only to a greater extent and can stay in the air for a short period of time. Next his ability to use the elements associated with plasma grow exponentially allowing him to use it's techniques with only one seal and the gain +15 damage and move much faster.

    Restrictions

    A-Rank
    -Last 4 turns
    -user loses the ability to use plasma chakra for two turns afterwards
    -Fire and Lightning chakra can only be used up to A-rank for next three turns

    S-Rank
    -Last three turns
    -User loses the abiliy to use plasma chakra for 4 turns afterwards
    -Fire and Lightning Chakra can only be used up to B-rank for next four turns

    Forbidden Rank
    -Last two turns
    -User loses the ability to use plasma chakra for the rest of battle
    -Fire and Lightning Chakra can only be used up to C-rank for rest of battle.
    -User becomes exhausted and moves with the speed of a standard Jonin class ninja.

    ~Declined~ Either A, S, or F your choice.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    [QUOTE=Oasis Nara;6369855]

    Re-Submitting
    Note : Mig gave me his permission to resubmit this via MSN


    Shinju: Shiro No Bin (Pearl Release: The White Jar)

    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A legendaryJar size of Gaara´s gourd, white with green markings made of solid pearl material which has been buried hundreds of years beneath the ocean and contains tens of unique shells with strong pearl chakra and they are able to keep producing little pearls where they live and bread inside the Jar, the Jar itself has been wielded by the Elders of Shells who have strong pearl chakra. Shells from the Jar are able to produce huge amount of pearls to keep unlimited amount of little pearls so the user of the Gourd is able to manipulate pearls as his/her wish, the Elder of Shells always carried this Jar to the battle fields and merged his pearl chakra to the Gourd so that he will be able to manipulate the pearls inside for many usage (attack, defense and supplementary), but the effect is the Jar drain the user chakra every time the user use it that’s why only a strong chakra possession and balance control ability able to use this Jar, meaning only Kage Rank. He passed down some of these Jars to those who have been loyal to the Shells kingdom and trained by the Elder himself how to use this Jar. The Elder made several of these Jars so that each user can have one Jar.



    Notes:
    - To use this Jar, person has to learn how to use it from ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
    - This Jar can be destroyed by a strong lightning jutsu
    - This Jar is considered as Weapon so the user cannot use his/her CW in the same battle he uses this Jar
    - Every time the user use pearl jutsu using this Jar, it will drain -10 chakra and after 7 turn use the user will be exhausted and lower their speed
    - After 3 turn use the Jar, the user can't use the Jar for 1 turn to give the pearl time to reload the pearls chakra production, that's applied to the following turns.
    - Can only be use for 10 turns max no more than that or the Jar will be destroyed afterwards.

    ~Declined~ Okay, first of all you still left the word 'Gourd' a few times in the description. Second of all at the part I highlighted; That is a very useless description you are trying to pass off as a restriction. You know why? To use the element you already need to be Kage rank so I would suggest you remove that unnecessary text in the submission. The requirement to use this Jar is also another obvious requirement when teaching the element to one of the two students. As for the last few highlights I have a question. Are you confusing turns with how many times per battle the jar can be used? And if not the you really need to re-write that because as it stands it is a mess to read and understand clearly.
    Picture of the Jar


    Shinju: Ame No Shinju (Pearl Release: Rain of Pearls)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damge Points: 40
    Description: The user releases from his Jar (or from one of the shell summons) a giant pearl, then the user sends the giant pearl into the sky, scattered it into pearl powder upon the sky and transform the powder into tiny winy thousands of pearls then pour them down from the sky aiming the opponent to buried him/her alive.

    Notes:
    Must be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ Okay I want you to reword the transforming into powder thing because that's not what your approved CE submission is about. You can manipulate solid pearl not powdered form. As for the thousands of pearls I need a more defined amount. Lastly, clarify the actual size of the "giant pearl". How big is this "giant pearl?
    Shinju: Kyojin Maruishi (Pearl Release: Giant Boulder)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Gourd (or Shell Summon), then merges them into giant boulder made of pearls half size of Gamabunta with sharp spikes all around the boulder and the user sends this boulder to the opponent with fast speed and the boulder will roll over the opponent brutally.

    Notes:
    Can only be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
    Can only be used 4 times per battle
    ~Declined~ You do realize how long it would actually take to release such a ridiculous amount of little pearls to form a boulder made of pearl half the size of Gama, right? You need to drastically lower the size of the boulder, and you have yet to define the speed, you simply changed it from "high" to "fast".



    Re-Subbmitting

    Shinju: Shiro daburufangu (Pearl Release: Double Fang)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Gourd (or Shell Summon), then form a white sharp fang in the user right and left hands, this fang are very sharp and able to pierces through solid, Steel or metal object.

    Notes:
    Can only be taught by Oasis Nara
    Can only be used 5 turns and vanished
    Can only be use 2 times per battle

    ~Declined~ Reduce the turns before they vanished if you want this allowed to be used twice per battle. And you really need to define the shape and size of these fangs. How many blades? How long are the sharp edges? etc, etc
    Shinju: P1 Bunshin "Petron" (Pearl Release: P1 Clone "Petron")
    Rank:B
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:20
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: P1 clone is a copy of the user but in shape of a white pale person. The clone itself can only use pearl release according of the user gain and knowledge of the pearl release, it can also utilize any pearl release even without having the white gourd or the shell summoning up until S-Rank pearl release.

    Notes:
    Can only be taught by Oasis Nara
    Can only be used 5 turns and vanished
    Can only be use 2 times per battle from the Jar / Shell Summoning

    ~Declined~ Still didn't fix what I asked for.
    Quote Originally Posted by Oasis Nara View Post
    Shinju: P2 Bunshin "Prime" (Pearl Release: P2 Clone "Prime")

    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will summon his giant shell which it will throw out a giant pearl into the air then the user perform 5 serial hand seal then push and placed his right hand into the giant pearl when it about to land while his left hand hold his right wrist and yell “PRIME” to manipulate the giant pearl and shape it into a giant bird double size of Gamakichi, Prime is the 2nd form of pearl bunshin manipulation called the “P2”, prime able to fly into the sky high with high speed while the user ride it, Prime shape pale white and have the ability to shoot out rapidly pearl ball size of a basket ball from the sky into the opponent and the pearl ball will crush everything within the impact, prime also able to defend from similar rank jutsu using it wing.

    Note: can only be use 3 times
    Note: Must have Shell summoning contract
    Note: Can only last 2 turn in field then auto disappear
    Note: No other pearl tech while the user ride Prime
    Note: Count as two turn as the user have to summon his giant shell
    Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ I don't see how pearl is light enough to fly, let alone at high speeds as you mentioned. Lastly, the pearl clone hasn't been approved so how is this the second form of it?

    (Pāru no tsuin ken) - Twin sword of Pearl
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: 60
    Description: As the user granted to manipulate pearl so he is able to extract two rare special twin blade made of pearl from deep down the sea which only certain people have the ability to do that. this twin sword one came out from a white pearl and the other came from the black pearl, this sword will infuse with the user pearl manipulation ability then able to release pearl jutsu (white and black Pearl release) up to S-Rank Pearl jutsu without any shell summoning but each use of this twin sword they shall drain the user chakra and lower their speed ability, this twin sword doesn’t have to be summoned but the user always wield it in their back.


    Note: Must have Shell pearl manipulation ability
    Note: Shall drain -10 chakra each use
    Note: The user can use them until their chakra run out meaning only KG rank can use it and only 8 time use
    Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ How are these swords generating enough pearl to create the techniques? What's "-5 speed" mean? 5 levels from our speed chart? Do not refer to the speed chart in future submissions. And also, if this is your custom weapon you need to include it in the "Type" section.
    Quote Originally Posted by Oasis Nara View Post

    Re Subbmitting
    Shinju: P2 Bunshin "Prime" (Pearl Release: P2 Clone "Prime")
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will summon his giant shell which it will throw out a giant pearl then the user perform 5 serial hand seal then push and placed his right hand into the giant pearl while his left hand hold his right wrist and yell “PRIME” to manipulate the giant pearl and shape it into a giant bird double size of Gamakichi, Prime is the 2nd form of pearl bunshin manipulation called the “P2”, prime able to fly into the sky high with high speed while the user ride it, Prime shape pale white and have the ability to shoot out rapidly pearl ball size of a basket ball from the sky into the opponent and the pearl ball will crush everything within the impact, prime also able to defend from similar rank jutsu using it wing.

    Note: can only be use 3 times
    Note: Must have Shell summoning contract / White Jar
    Note: Can only last 2 turn in field then auto disappear
    Note: No other pearl tech while the user ride Prime
    Note: Count as two turn as the user have to summon his giant shell or one turn if he using the white Jar
    Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ I still don't see how pearl is light enough to fly, let alone at high speeds as you mentioned. And you do know that a clone is a near perfect copy of the users appearance, correct? What you are describing in this technique is a pearl bird not a clone.

    "I'm erased the flying pearl part"


    Re-Submitting



    Shinju: Shiro No Bin (Pearl Release: The White Jar)

    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A legendary Jar size of Gaara´s Jar, white with green markings made of solid pearl material which has been buried hundreds of years beneath the ocean and contains tens of unique shells with strong pearl chakra and they are able to keep producing little pearls where they live and bread inside the Jar, the Jar itself has been wielded by the Elders of Shells who have strong pearl chakra. Shells from the Jar are able to produce huge amount of pearls to keep unlimited amount of little pearls so the user of the Jar is able to manipulate pearls as his/her wish, the Elder of Shells always carried this Jar to the battle fields and merged his pearl chakra to the Jar so that he will be able to manipulate the pearls inside for many usage (attack, defense and supplementary), but the effect is the Jar drain the user chakra every time the user use it that’s why He passed down some of these Jars to those who have been loyal to the Shells kingdom and trained by the Elder himself how to use this Jar. The Elder made several of these Jars so that each user can have one Jar.



    Notes:
    -This Jar can be destroyed by a strong lightning jutsu
    -This Jar is considered as Weapon so the user cannot use his/her CW in the same battle he uses this Jar
    -Every time the user use pearl jutsu using this Jar, it will drain -10 chakra per turn
    - Can only be use for 10 turns max no more than that or the Jar will be destroyed afterwards.
    ~Approved~


    Shinju: Ame No Shinju (Pearl Release: Rain of Pearls)

    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damge Points: 40
    Description: The user releases from his Jar (or from one of the shell summons) a giant pearl 50 feet long diameter, then the user sends the giant pearl into the sky, scattered it and transform the giant pearl into tiny winy one thousand of pearls then pour them down from the sky aiming the opponent to be buried alive.

    Notes:
    Can only be use 4 times
    Can be use onto multiple opponents that are very close to each other
    ~Approved~ Never ever include that the opponent dies in the description of the technique. I edited the highlighted to help its approval. If you are not satisfied feel free to drop me a VM/PM and I will change my verdict.

    Shinju: Kyojin Maruishi (Pearl Release: Giant Boulder)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Jar (or Shell Summon), then merges them into giant boulder made of pearls size 25 Feet long with sharp spikes all around the boulder and the user sends this boulder to the opponent with 150km/hour speed and the boulder will roll over the opponent brutally.

    Notes:
    Can only be used 4 times per battle
    ~Declined~ 25 feet long in what? diameter? and please compare to narutoverse speeds. I don't think you realize actually how fast 150km/hour is.
    Shinju: Shiro daburufangu (Pearl Release: Double Fang)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Jar (or Shell Summon), then form a white sharp fang in the user right and left hands just looks like Guren Crystal fang the different is this a pale white color fang and the fang itself 30cm size, the sharp edges 15 cm long in human normal hands with a single blade in each hands, this fang are very sharp and able to pierces through solid, Steel or metal object.

    Notes:
    Can only be used 3 turns and vanished
    Can only be use 2 times per battle

    ~Approved~

    Shinju: P1 Bunshin "Petron" (Pearl Release: P1 Clone "Petron")
    Rank:B
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:20
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: P1 clone is a copy of the user but in shape of a white pale person. The clone itself can only use pearl release according of the user gain and knowledge of the pearl release, it can also utilize any pearl release even without having the white gourd or the shell summoning up until S-Rank pearl release.

    Notes:
    As P1 using his body to release the pearl jutsu so it can only be used 3 turns and vanished
    Can only be use 2 times per battle from the Jar / Shell Summoning

    ~Declined~ You need to restrict the amount of times it can use jade techniques because reducing the turns before it vanishes won't solve anything. What if the prime clone uses six big scaled jade techniques during that time? He doesn't have enough body mass to accomplish such things.

    Shinju: P2 Katachidzukuru "Prime" (Pearl Release: P2 Shape "Prime")
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will summon his giant shell which it will throw out a giant pearl with size 25 feet long into the ground then the user perform 5 serial hand seal then push and placed his right hand into the giant pearl while his left hand hold his right wrist and yell “PRIME” to manipulate the giant pearl and shape it into a giant bird about 25 feet tall, Prime is the 2nd form of pearl level manipulation called the “P2”, prime able to fly into the sky high with his white wing in high speed 200 km/hour while the user ride it, Prime shape pale white and have the ability to shoot out rapidly pearl ball size of a basket ball from the sky into the opponent and the pearl ball will crush everything within the impact, prime also able to defend from similar rank jutsu using it wing.

    Note: can only be use 3 times
    Note: Must have Shells summoning contract
    Note: Can only last 2 turn in field then auto disappear
    Note: No other pearl tech while the user ride Prime
    Note: Count as two turn as the user has to summon his giant shell
    Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
    ~Declined~ 25 feet long in what? Diameter? This is one is very close to approval I just need you to compare the speeds in which it can travel to narutoverse because 200 km/hour is simply ridiculous.
     
         
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    Re: Custom Element's Jutsu

    ±Ibiton: Sono Mashin Reiki | Decay Release: The Mephistophelian Aura±
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 20 (-5 per turn)
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    The user does 2 hand seals (Boar+Ram) and releases his Decay Chakra into the field all around him up to mid range, unleashing a gold glow momentarily upon activation. Using the advanced release of Ibiton, the user is able to specifically decay only paper, writing ink and small amounts of metal (normal metal from kunais and shurikens and other normal weapons) that when entering mid-range from the user, crumble away into dust. Any Tag, Scroll, Shuriken, Kunai, etc present on the field crumbles into nothing as long as the technique is active, rendering the use of techniques that require such medium impossible.
    Note: Pertains to Scrolls and Paper Tags such as those used for various Fuuinjutsu (like explosive Tags or even FTG tags on Kunais, sealing scrolls, weapon scrolls, etc) and Ninjutsu. Because the rank of such techniques is determined not by the scroll/paper/tag used but by the technique that comes from it, all uses of such scroll and paper bound techniques are negated regardless of rank of the technique that will come from them.
    Note: The technique also affects any Kunai, Shuriken, Sword, etc made of the normal metal we find in most common weapons in Narutoverse (excluding, off course, Custom Weapons and the 7SM Swords). Once exposed on the field to the Decay Chakra all around, they crumble away into dust through the normal oxidation process most metals go through, rendering them useless.
    Note: Only works on Konan's Paper Ninjutsu up to B-Rank.
    Note: Once activated, remains active for 4 turns.
    Note: Has no effect on metal CE's or anything other than Paper, Ink and the aforementioned normal Weapons.
    Note: Doesn't blind or affect Dojutsu or Sensory Ninjas.
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    -Approved-
    I changed the duration to 4 turns.

    ±Ibiton: Sono Kougu no Odahviing | Decay Release: The Tools of Odahviing±
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30 (-10 per turn if kept active)
    Damage: 60
    Description:
    The user will take use of the specific release of Ibiton and manifest any construct his mind is able to imagine and visualize of that specific part of the release (Cubes, Spheres, Kunais, Swords, Walls, etc). These constructs, translucid and golden with a slight black hue in them, can be used to defend or attack. They can be created only Short-Mid range around the user but they can be thrown further. The user can control the movement of the constructs with or without the need for hand gestures, depending on the distance he is from them (Short range, no handgestures, Mid range requires hand gestures). Although hazardous to the enemies and anything present in the battlefield, the user can touch and interact with these constructs freely, taking advantage of their inherent properties to his own advantage. These constructs, if kept in short range, last until either dispelled or countered, making it a good choice to create weapons or defensive shields.
    Note: Usable 5 times per battle.
    Note: Creates only 1 item per use.
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    -Approved-
    Added a 2nd note.

    ±Ibiton: Megumi no Ulphir | Decay Release: The Blessing of Ulphir±
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40 (-15 per turn)
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    By using the advanced release of Ibiton, the user focuses Decay Chakra into his body to target specific substances and harmfull effects that might be affecting him. The user must only be aware that he's being affected by something harmfull to activate the technique. Doing the Rat handseal the user "wills" his decay chakra to search for harmfull toxins, poisons, isotopes, venoms, etc that might be affecting him in a negative manner and decays them into harmless biproducts, even to a molecular level if needed. While usefull when fightning Poison users such as medical ninjas, its also very very useful when fightning against users of radioactive elements (since the isotopes that are the core component of radiation are easily decayed, this technique can easily tear them apart, basically, decaying the "fuel" of radiation and thus, stopping it) or when, in general, fighting for long periods of time or in long skirmishes, were stamina and endurance is important. By focusing the Decay Chakra into his body, the user may also target toxins produced by his own body such as lactic acid produced from muscle activity. This enables the user to fight against the effects produced by such substances and creates a great resistant to pathogens. This technique may also be used to target harmfull organisms such as bacteria or fungus as well as virus, that may be inducing a pathogenic state on the user. The user can also, even if in a smaller scale and effect, use this technique on others through direct physical contact. When doing so, the effects are momentary, unlike when used on ones self. This means that if the ally has the "aggressive agent" cleaned from his system but has contact with it again, the technique needs to be used once more.

    Note: Usable 3 times, with 1 turn cooldown.
    Note: Its effects last for 4 turns each time, during which the user can't use Decay Release above A-Rank unless he dispels the technique.
    Note: When used on others, it counts as a single momentary use.
    Note: Has an effect on anything that falls under the description of "aggressive external agent" as long as it respects the elements unique strengths and weaknesses.
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    -Approved-


    ±Ibiton: Sono Doki no Azazel | Decay Release: The Wrath of Azazel±
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30 (-10 per turn)
    Damage: 60 (+20 to Taijutsu moves, +20 to Fire techniques S-Rank and below)
    Description:
    One of the basic techniques of Ibiton in which the user takes full advantage of the main release and the advanced release to power his hand to hand fighting. The user releases huge amounts of Decay Chakra through out his body, covering himself in an energy that resembles the "flames" of the main release of Ibiton. By doing this, not only does the user become extremely dangerous in hand to hand fighting as he gains a good defense against many energy based techniques as well as taijutsu as the decay chakra surrounding him is dense enough to also act as a defensive mechanism. As the user moves his body, he can release decay chakra as semi crescent waves, projectiles or localized jets/streams, by increasing the output of chakra in the correct timing, combining it with his taijutsu. Doing this enables the user to, for example, punch forward, releasing a burst of decay chakra or side sweeping his leg to create a semi crescent wave of decay chakra, all with the properties mentioned above, below and in Ibiton's definition (strength of A-Rank Ibiton). Not only that but since the user is shrouded in Decay Chakra that resembles flames, when using a Katon breath-related technique, it passively mixes with the Decay Chakra and creates an Ibiton/Katon combo with increased power. However due to the accelerated burn produced by the decay chakra, the fire techniques lose on rank in range, meaning that a long range technique becomes mid ranged, mid ranged becomes short ranged. This shroud of decay makes the user seem as if he's caught fire (in the colors that he can manifest the release), seeming as if flames are being fueled by his own essence. These "flames" have the normal properties of the main release with one additional property, given by the advanced release: when these "flames" touch animal flesh, they focus on decaying proteins, quickly liquifying enemy flesh. This effect, in essence, is more like the effects of a very hot flame/temperature, even if the manifestation of decay release doesn't have any kind of heat output.

    Note: Once activated, lasts for 4 turns
    Note: Can be used 3 times but requires a one turn cold down
    Note: The ranged bursts and projectiles passively made by combination with Taijutsu are A-Ranked and count as a move from the 3 per turn count.
    Note: While the technique is active, the user can't mold Water Techniques as doing so ends it
    Note: Because of the inherent properties of Decay Release (being based on Fire and Lightning), all Fire Breath Techniques S-Rank and below gain +20 in damage if the technique is active, by mixing passively with the decay chakra being released all around the user, creating a Ibiton/Katon combo. However range is reduced by the accelerated burn, losing one rank in range. This means that a long range technique will only reach mid range, mid range only short range. Short ranged techniques are unaffected by this.
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    -Approved-
     
         
    Last edited by Nexus; 07-12-2012 at 07:52 PM.

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