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    My second FF

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    Chapter Two
    The Defenseless.


    A young man was travelling through the forest,he often visited this forest as he was good freinds with the animals that resided here,and was one of the few that had ever set foot in this marvelous place.He ventured into the woods often,he was a orphan who often camped in a small sechluded cabin less than a mile away from the forest.However unlike any of the previous times he visited this forest,today he ventured deeper in than he had ever dared.He had often heard tales that the center of the forest was haunted,and that any who ventured there never came back alive,however he himself new that no one ever did venture there,as no one had ever had the guts to stand up to this so called "ghouls" that were said to reside there.How the rumor started he knew not,however it had kept him and every other person away from the center of the forest for the past sixteen years,however today,something seemed to to be calling out to him,beckoning him to venture deeper in,into the unknown.He knew not why,but he answered the call,and began to trudge through the forest into the so called "Dark Sector" the place where all dared not go.The boy was about Seventeen, he had thick blue spiky hair,and a strange atire that consisted of a white collard shirt,and navy blue combat pants.A strange cross shaped necklace adorned his neck,and a large greatsword hung onto his back the hilt sticking up over his shoulder, and blade running diagonally along his back,from top right to bottom left.He was of a quite slender yet muscular build,a build suited for the perfect combination of agility and strength,which must have been great to wield the large sword on his back.The boy had a sincere personality,and was loved by all he knew,he was often looked upon as a pure hearted man,except by girls his age who never took the time to understand him,as he often came across as arrogant and a pervert due to him always hitting on them.Eventually he came into a small clearing and in the clearing,lay a pile of what he would call goop or slime,with a teenage girl laying in the middle of the mess.It was evidently clear that the girl was asleep,it would be dark soon,and he soon realised that if she were to stay out here all night,in her current atire she would be dead by morn.So he took it upon himself to carry the girl back to Konoha.

    He trudged through the forest,he had long since left "the dark sector" and was now back into the forest that he knew and enjoyed,he carried the girl in his arms,she had slown him down quite it abit,but still he trudged on.While picking the girl up and carrying her he had taken care not to too stare at her body,as he knew it would be a shameful thing to peek at her while she was asleep and could not defend herself,he also new that it would be morally wrong.
    While walking he pondered upon who this girl might be,he was sure he had never seen her before,why had she been asleep in the woods partially naked?What was stranger still however,was the thick slime in which she had been sleeping in,and which still coats her body.
    He soon neared the edge of the forest,he had decided that instead of going back to his cabin,he would journey to Konoha,as it was only minutes away from where he exited the forest.

    When he finaly arrived at the gates of konoha,the sun was setting behind the horizon,showering the forest with its pale red light,the green trees sparkled a rusty red under the suns warm fading glow,and a soft breeze disturbed the silent air.

    As he approached, the two guards took to arms,drawing several kunai incase the need to attack may arise.The first guard,a large burly man began to open his mouth to say something,but in the end his mouth slapped shut as if he were a gaping fish as he thought better of it,his lips then parted again as he asked.
    "Who Goes there?"

    The boy replied with a short answer,and a plain expression
    "I"
    It must have been a answer that the guardsmen were accustomed to,since without further questioning the two men let him pass,as he was passing however he saw a large grin come across the second guards face,he immeaditly knew what the man was thinking.Rage welled in the boy at the recognition of the thoughts that were passing through the guards mind,he then seemingly instantly appeared behind the man,he held a kunai clecnhed inbetween his teeth,and pressed the kunai firmly against the right side of the mans neck.
    "You trash"
    The words were muffled by the kunai that he held in his mouth,but were still clearly audible,the guards face flushed bright red,embarrased at being so foolish,his heart also started to pulse rapidly as he realised he was in mortal danger.Then before the burly man,the first guard, could react,the boy was gone,racing into the center of the city.

    The next day the boy was walking through the city center,he had left the girl at his adopted mothers house,he figured if anyone could take care of her it would be his mother Sakume.He whistled as he walked through the city center,people swarmed around him like ants,the air was filled with the sweet smell of cotton candy,as he walked he gazed at the sky,watching as the clouds lazily drifted through the sky,he decided if he was to ever be anything other than a person,he wanted to be a cloud,he didnt know why,but he just did.At that moment he bumped into a tall red haird woman,just as he was about to apoligize,he decided not to ,and instead said.

    "Dang baby you must be tired cuz you...."

    Before he could finish his sentence however,his head ringed with pain,as the
    woman slapped him across his left cheek,he had seen it coming and could have easily dodged,but instead he had just decided to take it,the woman shouted in return.

    "Hitake you jerk!"

    So he continued on his walk,allowing his mind to drift away,he had wanted to go to war with Konoha,but the jounins and the edlers had deemd him to young,to inexperienced.So instead he had been forced to stay here.He wanted to try and fight and protect Naruto with his life,as it was that kid who had saved his life,he had kept a eye on naruto ever since he beat neji in the chuunins exam,he had even viewed some of his fight against gaara,he knew that he himself would never be able to surpass Naruto that day,while everyone had looked down on him,he had kept striving to become stronger,he admired that,and adopted some of the prinicipal for himself.

    The town however wasn't all that boring,bandits and missing nin' would often appear trying to ramshack the town while the main force of konoha was away,he and a few other ninja who remained in konoha,were tasked with driving the bandits off,and protecting konoha until the war was finished.
    Infact it was that time again,he had noticed that a large crowed of people were franticly rushing away from the area he was walking to,which meant that enemies were close by,however he kept plodding on,whistling and seeming as docile as possible,if anything he didnt want to startle the enemies,he would rather be looked down upon by his enmies until the last minute when the need to fight arised.It didnt take long until he spotted them,ragged bandits dressed in brown,clothes blotched and stained with blood and dirt.The bandits seemed to be pillaging a small shop,then before he could walk any further a voice alerted the fellow bandits to his position.

    "Oi you there where the hell do you think your going? Do y'a have a death wish son"

    It couldnt be helped,there were still several meters between him and the bandits,he had hoped to be able to capture or if need be kill all of them,and find out where their base was before any of them got away,but now the bandits had scatered taking up a defensive formation,one of the bandits was a fair distance behind the others,ready to flee if something were to go amiss,which was what Hitake feared the most.He knew that he had a slim chance of catching the man furtherst away from him before he ran to alert his boss,who would then change the place of the bandits hideout,which they did every so often.Each and everyone of the bandits new that if their hideout was to be attacked directly they would instantly be out of business so their main concern was keeping the location a secret.Another bandits voice ruptured Hitake from his thoughts

    "Oi you heard him,answer the man before i skin you alive you stupid brat"


    Before the rather plump bandit could speak again,hitake was dashing across the marketplace towards them,zigzaging as he ran as to avoid being a easy target to projectiles,he had quickly estimated that the number of bandits was no more than five,a number which he knew he could easily handle on his own.As he reached the plump man,he vaulted himself into the air,springing off of his left leg,and then swinging his right leg around in a horizontal windmill motion,slamming his foot into the mans jaw,he heard a click as he did so,and guessed the mans jaw was now dislocated,while he was dropping back to the ground, he watched as the man dropped to his left,writhing in pain.

    Then he watched as two rather skinny bandits came towards him,kunais in hand,the men had raggedy faces,but both looked extremely similar to eachother,he guessed they were brothers,no infact twins,since as he inspected them further,he noticed that they wern't similar,but rather indentical.One of them advanced from the right while the other from the left.Hitake quickly drew a kunai from his pouch,he threw it lazily above the left mans head,knowing it would distract him, then while he was distracted he charged at the right man,ducking low to avoid his oustretched kunai,and then rising upwards once he was past the mans guard,and delivering a right fist uppercut,that sent the man reeling backwards,he then quickly followed up with a roundhouse kick to the bandits right ribs with his left leg,that sent the man flying into a tree that was roughly a foot behind him.By this time the left bandit had recovered,also a volley of kunai were approaching from Hitakes right side,he realised that the kunai were also in the trajectory of the left bandit and that if he were to dodge them,they would quickly impale the bandit on his left.So Hitake quickly dropped foward as if he were about to land on his face,however at the last moment he extended his forearms,landing in a press-up stance then flexing his forearms,he jolted himself backwards upright,and turn to his left to see the left bandit skewerd by his own comrades kunai.

    Then turning to his right,he realised,the one who he guessed had threw the kunai had fled into the woods.

    All that remained was a large man carrying a explicably large double sided axe.As Hitake charged towards him,the bandits voiced boomed
    "You,You are the one who keeps wounded and killing us!!!"
    "Why if i brought your head to the boss,he'......


    Before the man had finished his sentence,Hitake had drawn his great sword,and drove it inbetween the mans left ribs,the man gurgled and sent blood splattering from to the ground from his mouth.However Hitake quickly realised that this wound was not enough to kill him,as the bandit began to lift up his broadaxe and began to swing it down so as to cleave Hitakes back in two.So Hitake quickly withdrew his sword from the mans stomach,and swung the flat of his blade upwards,the flat of his sword glanced off of the mans axe,but he realised it was enough force,to force the mans axe upwards slightly,and put the man off balance,sending him stumbling backwards,dust and sand rose from the ground,as the mans back slammed against the path.
    Hitake then withdrew a cloth from his pocket,which he used to clean his sword,he then sheathed it and walked away,he realised it would be futile to chace the remaining bandit,and was tired after a long day,so he headed back into the heart of the village towards his mothers house and alreted a guard to the defeated bandits positon on his way home.
     
         
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    Re: My second FF

    Master awesome
     
         

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    Ikr
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    Re: My second FF

    read both your fanfics... they are nice ^^ ... + rep
     
         

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    Nicely done^^ I also like how you added more dialogue in this one so + rep for that :D
     
         

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    Nice ^^
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    thanks
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    Dialogue ftw still reading its big
     
         

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    even without the dialogue, they are still awesome
     
         

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    u, Hitake and the girl? o_o
    Its getting good without too much dialouges. Btw, try to add space whenever you use . or ,
     
         

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    okay sure ^_^
     
         

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