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    [Contest] The Nine Verses of Shakujo

    Greetings, one and all. I, like many other members of NarutoBase, have a Custom Fighting Style, but there is a problem with the style. I've only been able to come up with nine (9) techniques for the style, which has an allotted ten (10) spaces. Due to this, I have decided to hold a contest with the first and only prize being that the winner can be the first person to learn my style. Below is the description of the style, the currently-approved jutsu, and the pending techniques, followed by the description of the contest.


    Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu (The Nine Verses of Shakujo)
    Type: NinKenjutsu
    Background: The Sage of Six Paths was a wandering monk who carried with him a type of staff known as a Shakujo. The Shakujo was a staff, normally used as a walking stick, with one end consisting of a large circle with other rings placed on the circle. As the Sage was preaching his teachings of chakra and ninjutsu, a small group of students noticed that the Sage carried with him his Shakujo, and were inspired to follow the path of the great man who was teaching them. The group of students each fashioned their own Shakujo and practiced their usage of hand-to-hand combat along with the usage of chakra, as taught to them by the Sage of Six Paths. While training for combat with the Shakujo, one of the members of the group discovered that by channeling his chakra through the staff, he could manipulate the rings on the end of his staff. Utilizing this new discovery, the group of men developed a fighting style based upon utilizing their chakra with their Shakujo. They then taught this style of fighting to others, who passed it down for generations.
    After the first generation of Shakujo users passed on, the second generation began to notice a pattern in the people they met on their travels. It appeared that each one of them used ranged applications of chakra, allowing them to fight at a distance so as to preserve their bodies and health. This second generation of Shakujo users, scared at the fact that all practitioners of chakra they had met were either soldiers or soldiers-in-training, left the way of the monk. No longer were they to be peaceful, but instead the Shakujo users went into practice to make their fighting style more versatile. It was the third generation who eventually discovered that chakra, in concentrated amounts, could cause a ring to simply move through the Shakujo to which it was bound, and cause the ring to float in the air around them. This gave birth to a new fighting style based upon a Shakujo's rings as controlled projectiles. As the generations advanced further and further, the style became more and more refined, slowly becoming the powerful style it is now.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu is a fighting style based around manipulating the rings of a Shakujo with chakra for both offensive and defensive purposes. The way the user manipulates their rings generally fall into one of two main categories:
    Bound Style - The Bound Style of The Nine Verses of Shakujo is based around the use of a Shakujo's rings while bound to the Shakujo. The user uses the staff itself as a regular staff while using the rings on it to augment attacks. By manipulating the rings with their chakra, the user can create multiple desirable effects such as rotating the rings at speeds great enough to allow them to cut clean through solid objects, causing the rings to clasp down on a sword so as to prevent its movement, among other uses.
    Ranged Style - The Ranged Style of The Nine Verses of Shakujo is slightly more unorthodox than the Bound Style, and was developed after the first generation of Shakujo users had passed away. This style allows the user to fill each of the rings of their Shakujo with their chakra, and then cause the rings to separate from the staff and to hover in their air of their own accord. The user's chakra is constantly being drawn into the rings as they float in order to keep them suspended in the air, and as such, each ring is capable of generating chakra seemingly from itself, while actually being the user's chakra sent to it through the air. The floating rings can then be manipulated by specific techniques to achieve effects such as deflecting projectiles, joining together to form a shield, and many other uses. Because of the users of this style being drawn towards power and being able to fight at distances rather than up close, the Ranged Style has been preferred over the Bound Style, and as such has been perfected with many more techniques designed for it than the counterpart.

    While both forms of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu draw from the user's chakra reserve, the Ranged Style is more prominently ninjutsu-based, while the Bound Style is based off of the mechanics of kenjutsu.
    Example Techniques:
    (Saisho no Uta: Kaiten Burēdo) - First Verse: Rotating Blades
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user channels their chakra through their Shakujo, which causes the loose rings at the end of their staff to appear to "stand up", as if they were repelled by some force at the center of the ring which binds them to the staff. Each ring then begins to spin at high speeds, and as each ring spins the sheer speed the metal material gains appears to give it a sharp quality, allowing the spinning rings to easily cut through C-rank and below Wood Style techniques, and even more solid materials such as Earth Style and steel swords or Steel Style.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the owner of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
    ~Can only cut C-rank and below techniques and objects without chakra

    (Saisan no Uta: Dansu Ringu) - Third Verse: Dancing Rings
    Rank: C
    Type: Offensive | Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 15 (-5 per turn)
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user channels their chakra through the rings of the Shakujo and causes the rings to separate from the main staff and float around themselves. The user can then manipulate the six rings in the air to deflect average weapons or to advance on the opponent and spin to cut them with the sharpness of an average sword. Each ring individually has no more strength than a freeform kunai, but they may be manipulated freely and can hang in the air as the user performs other techniques.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the owner of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
    ~Lasts 3 turns, or until the user calls the rings back to their Shakujo

    (Saishū-Tekina Uta: Rengoku) - Final Verse: Purgatory
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases the rings of their Shakujo, which leave the main staff and fly through the air, each to a separate location in order to create a sort of "box" around the user and his opponent. Then, each ring will begin to spin and release the user's chakra from itself, the chakra being drawn to the four rings immediately adjacent to it (chakra will not travel from, say, the ring to the left relative the user, to the right relative the user) in order to form a barrier in the form of a black sphere of chakra around the user and his opponent. While inside the barrier, the only techniques which can be used are those which originate from the user; earth release techniques that manipulate the ground, water release techniques which require a water source, and wind release techniques which manipulate the wind in the atmosphere are a few examples of techniques which cannot be used within the barrier. The user may also manipulate the barrier to rotate or roll at their will, allowing the user to spin the barrier in order to shift either their own or their opponent's position (assuming their standing on the barrier's surface) in order to dodge to be hit by attacks. The sphere can move so fast that techniques which aren't large-scale can easily be avoided by simply adjusting the barrier's, and therefore the people standing on the surface of the barrier's, position.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the owner of the Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu style
    ~Must be a practitioner of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu for at least two months before learning the Final Verse
    ~Only lasts 2 turns
    ~The barrier can only be destroyed by a Forbidden-ranked technique shot at the barrier, meaning all other techniques are contained within the barrier, making wide-scale attacks dangerous for the user as well as the defender
    ~Can only be used one per battle
    ~When the barrier disappears, the Shakujo's rings shatter, making it impossible for the user to use Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu for the rest of the battle

    Additional effects and Restrictions: -Can passively control the rings while bound to the Shakujo, not floating, in free-form
    -The Ranged Style of the Nine Verses of Shakujo is bound by techniques, making it impossible for the rings to separate from the Shakujo without a jutsu
    -Must have mastered kenjutsu
    -Must have at least begun Ninjutsu and mastered the Tree Climbing and Water Walking exercises for proper chakra control


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    P a t e n t C e r t i f i c a t e

    Sharingdork, our loyal member, gave on the 5th of February 2014 a request for a Patent on custom fighting style (Shakujo's no Kyū-Setsu ) Nine Verses of Shakujo. I, Madāra Uchiha of the Custom Fighting Style Bureau, by the power invested in me by Caliburn, after reading the submission, have decided that the submitted style satisfies all requirements, and am therefore giving him rightfully earned patent on this style by the following;


    Shakujo's no Kyū-Setsu | Nine Verses of Shakujo
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    (Saisho no Uta: Kaiten Burēdo) - First Verse: Rotating Blades
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive | Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user channels their chakra through their Shakujo, which causes the loose rings at the end of their staff to appear to "stand up", as if they were repelled by some force at the center of the ring which binds them to the staff. With each individual ring flattening against the fixture they're bound to on the end of the staff (so that it looks similar to the picture below, with no overlapping rings), each ring then begins to spin at high speeds. As each ring spins the sheer speed the metal material gains appears to give it a sharp quality, allowing the spinning rings to easily cut through C-rank and below Wood Style techniques, and even more solid materials such as Earth Style and steel swords or Steel Style. Kenjutsu of any rank may be used with the "sharp", spinning rings, but if a section of the staff rather than the rings makes contact with something, obviously there will be no cutting power.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
    ~Can only cut C-rank and below techniques and objects without chakra


    (Saisan no Uta: Dansu Ringu) - Third Verse: Dancing Rings
    Rank: C
    Type: Offensive | Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 15 (-5 per turn)
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user channels their chakra through the rings of the Shakujo and causes the rings to separate from the main staff and float around the stationary ring which previously bound them. The user can then manipulate the six rings in the air to deflect average and basic chakra-infused weapons, the ring returning to the staff on its own afterwards. Each ring individually has no more strength than a freeform, chakra-infused kunai, but they may be manipulated freely and can hang in the air around the Shakujo as the user performs other techniques.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
    ~Lasts 3 turns, or until the user calls the rings back to their Shakujo

    (Saishi no Uta: Roku-Ten Kanma) Fourth Verse: Six-Point Barrier

    Rank: A
    Type: Defense | Supplementary
    Range: Short (of user)
    Chakra Cost: 30 (-10 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user, after either having their rings already released from the Shakujo for a separate technique, or by releasing them specifically for this technique, will have each ring align itself in a hexagonal formation in front of them. The rings will then release chakra from themselves towards the other rings, creating a thin barrier of condensed chakra with advanced enough shape manipulation that the barrier can withstand up to A-rank attacks. The barrier may be adjusted as the user wishes, gesturing with the staff portion of their Shakujo where the rings, and by extension the barrier, will move, and can even be used to lift the user into the air and hover so long as they wish. The barrier's diameter is wider than the user's height by only a few inches.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu

    (Saigo no Uta: Rin'ne) Fifth Verse: Saṃsāra
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: Building upon the Shuriken Shadow Clone Jutsu, the user will release the rings from their Shakujo (or manipulate them once already released) towards the opponent. Then the user will strike the ground with the Shakujo's staff and clap the fist holding their Shakujo with their free hand. After making the improvised handseal, the rings will multiply and create a large wall of thousands of rapidly rotating projectile rings flying towards the opponent. After the barrage of rings, all but six will disappear, and those six will fly back to the Shakujo, reconnecting and falling limp afterwards.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
    ~Can only be used twice per battle
    ~The user cannot use any Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu techniques for two turns after using this jutsu

    (Sainana no Uta: Jigoku) Seventh Verse: Naraka
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30 (-5 per turn)
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will release the rings from their Shakujo (or manipulate them further if they're already released), and will send the rings into the sky. From there, the rings will all begin to spin as the user channels his Katon chakra into the rings. As the rings spin, they will generate a multitude of small fireballs, about the size of a ping-pong ball, which will fly in every direction and rain down on the ground. Due to the spacing of the rings and the range of the fireballs from each ring, the only safe place is a meter radius circle around the Shakujo's staff, which will cause the floating rings to move with it (meaning if the user, holding the staff, walks forwards, the rings above will move so that the user remains safe). When the technique ends, the rings will remain in the air for a second after they finish spewing flames before returning to the Shakujo.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
    ~Can only be used twice per battle
    ~Requires two turn minimum in between usages
    ~Lasts 3 turns, or until canceled
    ~The user can only use Katon and chakraless techniques while active

    (Saihachi no Uta: Kāma-Dhātu) Eighth Verse: Desire Realm
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive | Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 per sphere per turn) (-20 per sphere regeneration)
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user, after having the rings of their Shakujo separated either from an earlier technique or specifically for this jutsu, will have their rings begin to spin, but differently than normal. Normally, the rings spin along their own circular formation, which would make the ring appear to not be moving at all if one doesn't look closely. This is normally done to make the edges hot with friction and cause it to gain a type of cutting quality. The Kāma-Dhātu has the rings spin on a different axis so quickly that it almost looks like they've formed into small spheres instead of being simply rings from the blurring effect from the high-speed rotation (as if you took a ring or coin and spun it on its side on a table top) [see video below for further explanation]. As the rings spin, the users chakra is sent out to each ring equally and creates a field of chakra around the outside of each ring. As the rings spin, they move at a speed so fast that the chakra cannot cling to the physical being of the ring effectively, which creates a drag-like effect where the chakra from each ring is curved to such a high degree that the other end of the ring connects with the chakra "flowing" from the opposite end, creating a true sphere of chakra surrounding the spinning rings. Each sphere may then be controlled individually with strength granted by the constantly-rotating spheres of chakra equal to a B-rank technique of any element. When these spheres are damaged by C-rank and below techniques, the user may send more chakra to the damaged sphere to regenerate it and raise its strength back up to B-rank.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
    ~Can only be used twice per battle
    ~Must wait a three turn gap between uses
    ~Rings may return to the Shakujo at any time. Rings are forced to return if damaged by a B-rank technique. If they are damaged by an A-rank or above technique, the user must physically collect the ring as it can't "fly" back to the user being out of chakra
    ~Regeneration of spheres is a choice of the user's and counts as a move of their turn . Returning to the Shakujo staff if damaged by a C-rank or under technique (including no damage) is also a choice but doesn't count as a move. Rings which are returned to the staff or are damaged by A-rank and above techniques no longer count to the "-5 per sphere per turn" chakra cost


    (Saikyū no Uta: Ku) Ninth Verse: Dukkha
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive | Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user, either by manipulating his rings as they are floating or by separating them from his staff first, will cause the six rings to touch together, transferring all of their chakra to a single ring. This ring will then emit a chakra coating over itself as it spins, the chakra acting to help protect and strengthen the ring. The single ring, carrying the chakra of the other five, will then be able to move faster than an average kunai with as much precision as the user wishes, controlling it's direction with the end of their Shakujo. The ring may pierce through up to A-rank techniques without so much as losing momentum due to its small size, high rotation speed, and powerful protective chakra coating, allowing it to pierce through a great deal of defenses to pierce an opponent's body. Even if the opponent dodges, the user can control the direction of the ring with their empty Shakujo. The user may also, as all the chakra is transferred to a single ring, choose to imbue said ring with an elemental nature, giving it the strengths and weaknesses of said nature, as well as basic effects of the element on contact with an opponent (burning with fire, cutting with wind, numbing with lightning, etc.). When the technique has ended, the user must touch each of the fallen rings with their Shakujo to recollect them, as they have lost their chakra.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
    ~Can only be used once per battle
    ~The user cannot use any other jutsu while controlling the rings.
    ~If elemental natures are imbued, then jutsu above S rank for that element cannot be used next turn.
    ~No Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu techniques may be used for two turns after this technique's usage



    (Wasurete Saini no Uta: Pāramitā) Forgotten Second Verse: Six Perfections
    Rank: D-Forbidden
    Type: Defensive | Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 10 (per ring)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The Forgotten Second Verse is a technique of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu lost in time. After stumbling across an ancient scroll, the current master of the style rediscovered the secret technique, and took to mastering it right away. The technique itself is divided into two parts. The first part has the user channel chakra into the rings on their Shakujo. As each ring is filled with chakra, the second part of the technique becomes more powerful. The second part of the Forgotten Second Verse has the user strike the butt of the Shakujo's staff into the ground, after which the stored chakra in the rings is released in an omnidirectional burst of invisible (to the naked eye) chakra. When the chakra makes contact with a technique, the chakra in the technique will be disrupted and canceled, ending the jutsu. For every ring that had stored chakra, the rank of technique it can disrupt is increased (D for 1 ring, C for 2, B for 3, A for 4, S for 5, and Forbidden for 6). If the Forgotten Second Verse disrupts a technique of lower rank than it's potential, it continues to disrupt a second technique of the appropriate rank (according to NarutoBase's system for how powerful a weakened technique is). While the chakra burst has no direct effect on humans, clones, summons, and the like, the user may chain his Killing Intent with the burst (much like how one can chain Genjutsu with (Raigen Raikochu) – Lightning Illusion Flash of Lightning Pillar), causing, for a moment, the effects of his short-ranged Killing Intent should the burst reach his opponent.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of the Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu style
    ~Must be a practitioner of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu for at least two months before learning the Forgotten Second Verse
    ~It costs one move to store chakra within two rings. When chakra is stored, the user no longer needs to focus on said chakra, allowing him to use other techniques while preparing the Forgotten Second Verse
    ~When a ring has chakra stored in it, it becomes suspended around the ring attached to the Shakujo's staff to which it is bound, making it float without resting on anything and to rotate slowly. Rings with stored chakra may not be used for Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu techniques
    ~If the user has chakra within all six rings when he uses the Forgotten Second Verse (ie. Forbidden-rank version), the chakra burst will be so intense at the epicenter (the Shakujo), that they will feel as if they ran into a solid wall. Their body will be weakened and made more fragile; bones will be easier to break, skin and muscles will tear more easily, etc. Using the Forbidden-rank version again will break ribs, and a third time will completely shatter a great deal of the user's bones. Every time, the force of the "impact" causes the user to cough up blood

    (Saishū-Tekina Uta: Rengoku) - Final Verse: Purgatory
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases the rings of their Shakujo, which leave the main staff and fly through the air, each to a separate location in order to create a sort of "box" (more akin to a sphere or ellipse) around the user and his opponent. Then, each ring will begin to spin and release the user's chakra from itself, the chakra being drawn to the four rings immediately adjacent to it (chakra will not travel from, say, the ring to the left relative the user, to the right relative the user) in order to form a barrier in the form of a black sphere of chakra around the user and his opponent. While inside the barrier, the only techniques which can be used are those which originate from the user; earth release techniques that manipulate the ground, water release techniques which require a water source, and wind release techniques which manipulate the wind in the atmosphere are a few examples of techniques which cannot be used within the barrier. The user may also manipulate the barrier to rotate or roll at their will, allowing the user to spin the barrier in order to shift either their own or their opponent's position (assuming they're standing on the barrier's surface) in order to dodge or to be hit by attacks. The sphere can move so fast that techniques which aren't large-scale can easily be avoided by simply adjusting the barrier's, and therefore the people standing on the surface of the barrier's, position.
    Note: ~Can only be taught by the owner of the Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu style
    ~Must be a practitioner of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu for at least two months before learning the Final Verse
    ~Only lasts 2 turns
    ~The barrier can only be destroyed by a Forbidden-ranked technique shot at the barrier, meaning all other techniques are contained within the barrier, making wide-scale attacks dangerous for the user as well as the defender
    ~Can only be used one per battle
    ~When the barrier disappears, the Shakujo's rings shatter, making it impossible for the user to use Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu for the rest of the battle





    Now for the actual contest. Whoever can come up with the best technique for this style, following the guidelines for the CFS format, will be the winner, have their technique submitted for the style, and will subsequently be taught Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu in its entirety. So, basic guidelines for the contest:
    • Techniques must follow proper CJ format (naturally)
    • Techniques must fall under either the Bound or Ranged style of Shakujo no Kyū-Stsu (naturally)
    • Techniques must not be similar to existing techniques, either approved or pending (also naturally)
    • The contest will be open for six weeks (to be closed August 22), so take your time - don't rush
    • If two submitted techniques are similar, the first person to submit the technique will win the contest (naturally)
    • Submissions will be posted here, and not PMed to me. **If a technique is PMed to me, and I like it best, I will submit it with no credit to the original submitter**
    • I will be the only judge for the techniques, as it is my style, so my word is final. My personal "grading system" will be used, and no explanation for why a technique did or didn't get chosen will be given

    The contest is open, and may the best technique win.

    **UPDATE**
    "(Wasurete Saini no Uta: Pāramitā) Forgotten Second Verse: Six Perfections" has been declined without much hope for being fixed and approved (Purgatory could potentially be fixed). Because of this, two techniques will be accepted. And, to make it fair, I've decided that six weeks will be the official length of the contest to remove ambiguity.
     
         
    Last edited by Sharingdork; 07-12-2014 at 03:17 PM.

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