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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Bow:Schneider
    Type:Weapon
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:40
    Damage:N/A
    Description:Schneider was forged long ago by an old weapon master named Gohan,it took him years to complete the bow but sadly when it was completed Gohan died.Schneider is a bow that can shoot pure chakra (D rank).This is almost never used though. It is a lightning style weapon, so it primarily shoots arrows made of the users raiton chakra solidified, but is able to shoot water, fire, and wind bullets (all C rank). The arrows are shot at twice the speed of a thrown kunai, and are quite powerful (A rank). The bow is unbreakable, and is able to deflect kunai,shuriken,etc. The user is only able to shoot four arrow per turn, and it takes about 4 seconds to reload after firing each arrow. The user is also able to decrease the power of the arrow(C rank), but make it light and faster (speed of a Kage ranked taijutsu master). When the arrows are shot, they don't make a sound but they are easy to spot. The bow itself is black as night, and is about 3 ft long. The bow is usually carried on someone's back.

    Restrictions

    -Can only be wielded by PresidentBush-
    -Stays in battle for five turns-
    -Cannot be summoned during battle only before or after-
    -No earth arrows-

    X-Declined-X I dont know, 4 elemental arrow shots of varying elements, you could make a combo of many different element in a single move. That itself is not a issue, but the fixed chakra cost of 40. Cant be approved unless you work to make it better in both description and abilities
    Resubmitting

    Bow:Schneider
    Type:Weapon
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:40 on activation -10 per turn
    Damage:N/A
    Description: Schneider was forged long ago by an old weapon master named Gohan, it took him years to complete the bow but sadly when it was completed Gohan died. Schneider is a bow that can shoot pure chakra (D rank).This is almost never used though due to its weak nature. It is a lightning style weapon, so it primarily shoots arrows made of the users raiton chakra solidified, but is able to shoot fire arrows as well (B rank). The raiton arrows are shot at twice the speed of a thrown kunai, and are quite powerful (S rank). The user can shoot one raiton arrow that is S rank per battle. After that, all raiton arrows shot are A rank and all Katon arrows shot stay at B rank. The bow is unbreakable, and is able to deflect kunai, shuriken, etc. The user is only able to shoot four arrows per turn, and it takes about 4 seconds to reload after firing each arrow. The fire arrows are thinner, but are lighter and faster (speed of a Kage ranked taijutsu master). When the arrows are shot, they don't make a sound but they are easy to spot. The bow itself is black as night, and is about 3 ft long. The bow is usually carried on someone's back.

    Restrictions

    -Can only be wielded by PresidentBush-
    -Stays in battle for five turns-
    -Cannot be summoned during battle only before or after-
    -Can only shoot fire, lightning, and pure chakra arrows

    |Kamehameha|Turtle Devastation Wave
    Type:Offence
    Rank:A
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Description:The user cups his hands together, and puts them by his side. The user then concentrates his raiton chakra into a single point between the cupped hands (hands must be very close or touching). The user then fires off a beam of focused raiton energy which is capable of destroying S rank and below earth based defenses. The beam is about a half-meter wide.

    Restrictions

    No raiton for 1 turn after using this.
    leaves the user slightly stunned from the bright light released from the wave (lasts about 5 seconds)
    Only used twice per battle

    Super Saiyan
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:C
    Range:self
    Chakra:15
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user simply focuses chakra all around his body, and does a simple transformation technique. The transformation technique gives him golden blonde hair, and the chakra gives him a small aura that covers him. The chakra flowing over the user increases his physical strength giving him a +10 boost to taijutsu. The point of the transformation technique is that it makes the user more bad ass, but is not necessary to the technique itself.

    Restrictions

    Usable once per battle
    Lasts for 3 turns
    The user is slightly winded after using this, and his reflexes are slightly delayed (lasts for 1 turn)
    This does not increase speed in any way

    X-All declined-X
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 12-24-2012 at 01:36 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Daburuhātokiyanon) -
    Double thread Canon

    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90
    Description:
    Kakuzu, using both his wind and Fire masks released from his body, using the power of both hearts, releases a pressurised wind/fire bullet towards the centre of the battlefield that creates a flaming whirlwind which draws his opponent and mostly anything around the terrain towards it with the strength of a F5 tornado sucking something in and quickly turning the it to ash.
    Will drag in anything with a 25m radius thus running risk of destroying the user if he's caught in range.
    Note:
    - Can only be used by Kakuzu
    - Only taught by william24
    - Can only be used once a battle
    - The Fire/Wind masks can only use B-rank jutsu for the rest of the battle.

    X-Declined-X A tornado wont function that way when its on fire

    (: Bách ) -
    Tiglon summon: Bách

    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:
    The user uses his blood and uses the normal summoning technique or wipes blood on his Tiglon tattoo and summons the Tiglon's king's twin brother; Bách. Bach is a large, all black Tiglon, being nearly the size of a full grown elephant though his body mass is pure muscle. Unlike his brother, who has a short mane, Bách has a large black mane that flows with the wind. Like all other Tiglon's Bách can taX--XX--Xlk and communicate with his summoner and can speak to the contract owner via telepathy. Bách is known to be the calmest and most strategic Tiglon alive.
    Abilities:
    Being the twin brother of Aizen, Bách is known to be one of the best Tiglon's in combat and is feared in battle.
    Bách was born with an affinity to the fire element in which he can perform jutsu up to A-rank rank in without the use of hand seals. Once a battle, Bách is capable of transforming his entire mane in to flames in which he has control of, the the flames aren't used to attack. With his firey mane active he is able to absorb up to A-rank fire techniques into his mane, which in rerurn enlarges the flaming mane.

    - Only taught by william24
    - Can only be summoned once and lasts 4 turns
    - Absorption ability counts towardz the alotted jutsu per turn

    Contract approval

    X-Approved-X Removed the reference of speed, you should know how lazy hybrids are, its picture representation further clarifies that.

    (Genjutsu: Nemurerumori no bodi ) -
    Illusion arts: "Sleeping" body

    Type: Attack/supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    The user first performs 2 hand seals (Tiger--Boar) which is used as a medium to transfer chakra into the opponents nervous system and take control of their sense of touch. With that done the opponent will be trapped in the illusion and begin feeling the affects. The opponents arms, hands, legs and feet would instantly "fall asleep" and become numb to a degree, along with an extremely intensified tingling feeling throughout out those body parts. This would successfully slow down the opponents movements drastically due to the lack of control people have over their body when a body part "sleeps", and would make it highly difficult to react to attacks, perform hand seals and to attack or defend physically.

    - Only taught by william24
    - Can only be used twice per battle
    - Can be used on multiple opponents at once

    X-Declined-X Tried countless times, just use temple of nirvana.
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 12-24-2012 at 01:45 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Suiton: Sono Heika Kara Inai ) Water Style: The arms from within
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15 ( + 10 for each turn)
    Damage Point: N/A
    Description: 30
    Note: The users begins by gathering their water chakra in their upper body. Once collected using their unique hozuki ability, the user creates two arms created from water on each side of their waist. The water arms are slower than the users original arm due to the high levels of water. The water arms can perform handseals, but slower than human arms.

    - Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    - The arms last for three turns
    - Can only be used by Hozuki bio's
    - Can only be taught by -Cerberus-



    (Suiton: Gosunkugi Gyaruson ) Water Style: Spike Boy
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Point: 30
    Description:
    Note: The users begins by gathering their water chakra throughout their body. Once collected the user releases the chakra in a quick burst. The user uses shape manipulation to shape the released water into thin 'senbons' that cover the users whole body and can pierce anybody in close combat.


    - Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    - Can only be used by Hozuki bio's
    - Can only be taught by -Cerberus-

    X-Both Declined-X They are C rank... given the abilities, atleast elevate them to B. And make sure to give a proper reason why, arms of water that are being controlled by chakra itself lets you manipulate your chakra for other techniques.

    (Raiton: Sankaku Senkou Sen ) Triangle Flash Beam
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Point: 60
    Description: The user begins by creating a triangle by with their hands. They then channel their lightning chakra into both their hands while holding the triangle. Once ready they 'lock on' onto their target, and shoot out the beam. The user uses shape manipulation to give the beam a triangle shape. The user can fire a max of 3 beams at the opponent in a row before the jutsu takes its toll on the user, due to the amount of chakra they lose.

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    Can only be used three times in a battle
    Can only be taught by -Cerberus-

    X-Declined-X You can tell this has been tried before
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 12-24-2012 at 01:50 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Lysander View Post
    (Raiton:asoko temae) Lightning release:There you are
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank:C
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:15
    Damage: 30
    Description:The user will unleash small lightning particles unnoticeable by the naked eye throughout the terrain.Once he has done this anything which comes into contact with the small lightning particles the user will know allowing them to sense anyone who is within range of the lightning particles.
    -Has to be taught by Lysander
    -Only those with a dojutsu can see the lightning particles
    Resubmitting.

    (Raiton:asoko temae) Lightning release:There you are
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank:C
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:15
    Damage: 30
    Description:The user will unleash small lightning particles unnoticeable by the naked eye throughout the terrain.Once he has done this anything which comes into contact with the small lightning particles the user will know allowing them to sense anyone who is within range of the lightning particles.
    -Has to be taught by Lysander
    -Due to them being small the enemy needs to focus on them to see them but are still noticeable.

    X-Declined-X Same as the last time
    New submission.

    The spear of words (sono yari serifu)
    Type:Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:The spear of words,Forged from the finest metal materials from a human with extraordinary powers making it indestructible.The spear itself comes in two parts which the longest spear being 1.8 meters long and 4 cm thick and the second spear being only one meter long and still 4cm thick.The two spears both share the same abilities and are able to join together to form one long spear.The spear works extremely well with raiton chakra carrying some inside of it making all earth chakra which comes one meter radius spear around up to A rank cancel out making the earth jutsu have no effect.The spear itself has destructible power making the user while using the staff have power similar to that of the jutsu chakra enhanced strength.The last ability is for the staff to come back to the user when thrown due to it containing the users chakra.
    -Cancelling out the earth chakra counts as one of the three moves and can only be used three times a battle.
    -Can only be used by Lysander and if anyone else tries to pick it up it weight changes to five tons making it impossible to use.
    -The returning of the staff is only usable three times.

    Picture of the weapon:http://images5.fanpop.com/image/phot...75-604-533.jpg

    X-Approved-X

    This is my first weapon.
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 12-24-2012 at 01:53 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Fire Release: Rise from hell
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid - Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 100
    Description: The user preforms a set of 4 hand signs and releases his fire chakra into ground. As he does so, the user manipulates the fire chakra with great chakra control to make a gigantic fire geyser erupt from beneath the opponents feet. This technique is extremely hard to avoid due to it's sheer size and range it covers. The user will face serious drawbacks due to the amount of chakra it takes to use.
    -User feels dizzy and finds it hard to move for 2 - 3 turns
    -Cannot preform and S Rank fire attacks for 3 turns
    -Fire must be mentioned in your biography as a speciality to use this technique
    -Can only be preformed twice per battle

    X-Declined-X Existing technique+Incorrect damage points
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Jeet Kune Do Approval.
    (Jeet Kune Do: Doragon's Kei) Jeet Kune Do: Dragon's Thorn
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage: 30 (+10 per strike to the chest)
    Description: Deriving from the destructive force of a kick from Bruce Lee. The user will send a kick to the chest of the opponent with enough force behind it to crack the opponents chest slightly, making it so that the opponents arms are slower due to pain. This would make the opponents arms slower due to the pain they will feel by moving their arms due to their cracked chest. It can also lower regular body speed in general to someone that isn't skilled in controlling their own balance as any step would shake their chest as well because when someone moves, nearly every muscle in their body moves as well. After the first kick to the chest, any other kick afterwards will reduce the speed of their opponents arms by 10% and their over all body movement by 5%, until finally, the opponent can't move their arms anymore and is reduced to walking instead of running due to pain. The kick will also knock the air from the opponents lungs, immobilizing them for a few seconds. The kick it'self will send the opponent away by 7 meters, allowing the opponent to catch their breath before needing to defend the user again.

    Note: Must be a Jeet Kune Do master to perform this.
    Note: People or masses with great density and muscle mass won't be affected as much or affected at all. Examples: Bee, 3rd and 4th raikage. In other words this attack would work greatly on someone with the body type of rock lee whereas someone like Raikage would more than likely just feel a hard kick with their muscle tissue absorbing a lot of the impact.

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    Incorrect chakra info. I won't check any technique that doesn't follow template. As a submitter is your duty to fill out the template properly and to actually follow it.



    (Jeet Kune Do: Doragon's Kei) Jeet Kune Do: Dragon's Thorn
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage: 30 (+10 per strike to the chest)
    Description: Deriving from the destructive force of a kick from Bruce Lee. The user will send a kick to the chest of the opponent with enough force behind it to crack the opponents chest slightly, making it so that the opponents arms are slower due to pain. This would make the opponents arms slower due to the pain they will feel by moving their arms due to their cracked chest. It can also lower regular body speed in general to someone that isn't skilled in controlling their own balance as any step would shake their chest as well because when someone moves, nearly every muscle in their body moves as well. After the first kick to the chest, any other kick afterwards will reduce the speed of their opponents arms by 10% and their over all body movement by 5%, until finally, the opponent can't move their arms anymore and is reduced to walking instead of running due to pain. The kick will also knock the air from the opponents lungs, immobilizing them for a few seconds. The kick it'self will send the opponent away by 7 meters, allowing the opponent to catch their breath before needing to defend the user again.

    Note: Must be a Jeet Kune Do master to perform this.
    Note: People or masses with great density and muscle mass won't be affected as much or affected at all. Examples: Bee, 3rd and 4th raikage. In other words this attack would work greatly on someone with the body type of rock lee whereas someone like Raikage would more than likely just feel a hard kick with their muscle tissue absorbing a lot of the impact.

    I didn't put any chakra info because in the Wikia, it says Taijutsu does not require chakra but chakra can be used to enhance it. As well as strong techniques in the taijutsu list that don't require chakra. I understand that techniques that can be done in freeform don't require chakra so if you're saying it needs chakra to provide the effect I'm wanting then I completely get it.

    X-Pending-X Leaving for someone else

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    DNR
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by mangekyo byakugan View Post
    For Pillars of Judgment
    Hyouton: Handanryoku "Betrayal" (Ice Release: Pillars of Judgment)
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid Range
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: After the technique pillars of judgment been in play, the user will judge the opponent and the opponent in the users mind will be labeled as "betrayal". The user will pass the judgment into 'real life' and perform two hand seals and cause the pillars or judgment to explode inwards towards the trapped opponent(s). The explosion however is unique, it happens at a fast pace and all sides explode at the same time so the opponent will have little time to counter.
    -Like pillars of Judgment it is usable four times per battle.
    -No S rank ice in the same turn.
    -Must have mastered ice release.

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    How does Ice Explode? And why would it explode? You simple assume it explodes but you fail to explain how it explodes.

    Resubmitting the others with changes.

    Hyouton: Kagirinai(Ice Release: Unlimited)
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid Range
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: The user first performs a sequence of five hand seals and creates six ice weapons(any kind of weapon sword, spear, axe...)two of the weapons will be in the users hands the other four will be on his sides (from, back, left, and right)After the weapons are created the user will hold out the two weapons in his hands and spin inside the "square" of weapons, while the user spins he release his chakra from the weapons in his hands and manipulates his chakraso it forms a ice wall that is above the four weapons this causes *the weapons in his hand to "disappear" and "form" wall and the weapons on the ground will have their "tips"(the area which is pointing upwards) "inside the wall"(the chakra added by the weapons that were in the users hand will form the wall, so the weapons on the ground will be encased by the wall) *the user will then use further shape and chakra manipulation to increase the length of the weapons that are encased in/by the wall so they are "spikes"(for example if a spear will have the spear head as the "spikes" a sword will have it's tip as the spikes so on and so forth for other weapons) on top of the wall the user then performs five hand seals and causes the same process to occur but this time the weapons will cover the entire wall(so weapons are now on the inner and outer sides of the wall as well). The user can make a maximum of 6 walls with a minimum of 3 walls. Now after the desired number of walls are created the user will perform two hand seals and direct the "cyclone" of weapons toward his opponent(s) the "cyclone" has a radius of 3 meters and it can be decreased to a smaller radius through the user will, the "cyclone" has the weapons on it's "tip". The user can attack using this technique by either directing the "tip" of the cyclone to the opponent(s) or by trapping the opponent(s) inside the "cyclone" and let it close in on them and get hit by the weapons from the inside
    -The user can manipulate the weapons on the side of the wall to either stay sharp or to cease to be sharp if the user chooses to use the technqiue as a defensive.

    -Usable once but when used as a defense it lasts until the user attacks with it
    -must have mastered ice
    -must be member of yuki clan.
    -no forbidden ranked techniques for the rest of the battle.
    -can't be performed by shadow clones or when shadow clones are created.
    -for the next three turns the user is restricted to D rank water and wind and no ice.

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    Ever heard of periods? sentences? and nvm that, ever heard of english? This technique is a mess and such poorly described it can't even be checked anymore. Either learn to explain what you want in a simpler, easier way to understand or get someone to help you.

    Didn't bold changes in discretion due to vast changes.
    Hyouton: Zairu (Ice Release: Spiked Laso)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Short-Mid Range
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will first perform two hand seals and send his chakra to one of his index fingers as the chakra is in his finger the user will "swing" his finger towards the opponent and a rope completely made of ice will travel towards the opponent, the rope is like a Laso so it has a circular area on the front side of it. The user will capture a part of the opponents body with the circular area and will follow it up by clicking his index finger to another finger causing the rope where the circular area is present to tighten and squeeze the opponent, the user will then once again click his index finger with another finger and cause the area where the circular form is present to have spikes emerge from it and impale the opponent. For example if I made the rope captures my opponents left hand palm area and I continue the jutsu they will get spikes passing through his arms and the spikes that are opposite to each other will collide at the center so there is where it will stop progressing p.
    -The size of the circular area can be controlled with a minimum size that of an ant and maximum size of that of a elephant so this technique can be used on some summons.
    -When the user clicks his index finger with another finger their chakra will be sent through the rope towards the circular area there is a delay of 3 second until the chakra reaches if used from mid range.
    -The user can choose not to use the secondary ability of the technique(spikes) but if he uses it on another turn it will count to the jutsu limit

    -Must be from Yuki Clan.
    -Must have mastered Ice release.
    -Usable three times per battle.
    -No s rank ice and above on the same turn.

    X-Pending -X Leaving for someone else

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    Work the description. For something so simple it has such a complicated description that leaves it almost incomprehensible.
    Hyouton: Handanryoku "HaiShin" (Ice Release: Pillars of Judgment "Betrayal")
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid Range
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: After the technique pillars of judgment has been in play, the user will judge the opponent and the opponent in the users mind will be labeled as "betrayal". The user will pass the judgment into 'real life',he/she performs two hand seals and cause the pillars of judgment to explode inwards towards the trapped opponent(s). The explosion of ice happens due to the user forcing chakra to the ice, causing it to detonate, exploding in a manner similar to how the demonic ice mirrors explode. The explosion however is unique, it happens at a fast pace and all sides explode at the same time so the opponent will have little time to counter/react
    -Like pillars of Judgment it is usable four times per battle.
    -No S rank ice in the same turn.
    -Must have mastered ice release.

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    Exactly why I wanted you to explain why and how they explode. Its now simply a copy of an existing technique as you're using a method used countless times before in other CJs and mimicking the cannon technique. Saying its unique doesn't change the fact it isn't. DNR

    Hyouton: Zairu (Ice Release: Spiked Laso)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Short-Mid Range
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will first perform two hand seals and send his chakra to his hands as the chakra is in his/her hand the user will "swing" his/her hand towards the opponent and a rope completely made of ice will appear and head towards the opponent, the rope is like a Laso so it has a circular area on the front side of it. The user will capture a part of the opponents body with the circular area and will follow it up by clapping his/her hands together causing the rope to tighten, the user will once again clap and cause spikes to emerge from any location of the Laso/Rope.
    -The size of the circular areacreated by this technique can be controlled as the user whises, the smallest size of the circular area is 2 centimeters and the Maximum size of the circle is 4 meters
    -The user can choose not to use the secondary ability of the technique(spikes) but if he uses it on another turn it will count to the three Jutsu limit
    -User will be attached to the laso by an ice rope. If he lets go of it, the technique disperses.
    -Must have mastered Ice release.
    -Usable three times per battle.
    -No s rank ice and above on the same turn.

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    ±± Approved ±±
    added note

    Hyouton: Handanryoku "Kentan" (Ice Release: Pillars of Judgment "Gluttony")
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Mid Range
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: After invoking the the ice release pillars of judgment technique, the user will judge the opponent(s) as Gluttonious, the user will deem the opponent(s) not worthy of life, due to the opponent(s) having 'sucked up' enough of the world's air so they are deemed unworthy of living, and judged to a gruesome 'sliced' death. To activate this technique, the user will perform five hand seals(boar—>Tiger—>Snake—>Ox—>Dragon) and cause 'sheets' of ice to emerge from the inside of the IRPOJ technique, the 'sheets' of pure ice come from every angle of the parallelogram of ice, they emerge in a fast speed(speed of a thrown Kunia with wind chakra infused to it, and the user has chakra enhancing strength active) the sheets come from the all the sides of the parallelogram with the 'roof' included, the sheets also form diagonals, from the sided of the parm(point A to C and point B to D). Only one sheet emerges from the diagonals making them two diagonals, the sides however have numerous sheets of ice, the number of sheets that 'appear' can be controlled by the user, the maximum number of sheets however is 16. Now the only issue that remains is that the sheets of ice will collide with each other, and destroy and intercept the path of each other, the user took notice of this flaw while developing the technique, so he thought of a way to overcome the problem, his solution was to swiftly decompose the junction points of the sheets of ice, with other sheets of ice to water and 'refreeze'/turn them back to ice instants later, allowing the ice sheets to not 'harm' each other.
    -Unlike IRPOJ which can be used four times, this can only be used two times.
    -No S rank wind and water on same turn, thus no S rank ice on same turn.

    Quote Originally Posted by mangekyo byakugan View Post
    Hyouton: Kagirinai(Ice Release: Unlimited)
    Type: Attack/Defense*
    Rank: Forbidden*
    Range: Short-Mid Range*
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: *The user first performs a sequence of five hand seals and creates six ice weapons(any kind of weapon sword, spear, axe...)two of the weapons will be in the users hands the other four will be on his sides (from, back, left, and right)After the weapons are created the user will hold out the two weapons in his hands and spin inside the perimeter of the weapons, while the user spins he release his chakra *from the weapons and manipulate it so it forms a ice wall that is above the four weapons this causes the weapons in his hand to disappear and "go" to the wall and the weapons on the ground will have their "tip" inside the wall the user will then use further shale and chakra manipulation to increase the length of the weapons so they are "spikes" on top of the wall the user then performs five hand seals and causes the same process to occur but this time the weapons will cover the entire wall. The user can make a maximum of 6 walls with a minimum of 3 walls. Now after tue desired number of walls are created the user will perform two hand seals and direct then"cyclone" of weapons toward his opponent(s) the "cyclone" has a radius of 3 meters and it can be decreased to a smaller radius through the user will, the "cyclone" has the weapons on it's "tip" and the walls(inside and out) are fill of jagged pillars of ice that are emerging from every direction of walls. The user can attack using this technique by either directing the "tip" of the cyclone to the opponent(s) or by trapping the opponent(s) inside the "cyclone" and let it close in on them.
    -Usable once
    -must have mastered ice
    -must be member of yuki clan.
    -no forbidden ranked techniques for the rest of the battle.
    -can't be performed by shadow clones or when shadow clones are created.
    -for the next three turns the user is restricted to D rank water and wind and no ice.


    Hyouton: *Zairu (Ice Release: Spiked Laso)*
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Short-Mid Range*
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will first perform two hand seals and send his chakra to his index finger after that is done he will swing his finger in the air above him and follow it up by directing his finger towards his opponent as the user directs his finger towards his opponent he releases the Hyouton chakra built up in his finger in the form of a transparent (similar to the transparency of ice disk tech) rope that has a "whole" in it in the front after the opponent is caught inside the rope the user will "click" one finger to his index finger and cause the rope to tighten around the opponent since chakra is built up in the second finger and through the clickage the user sends his chakra down the rope the user will then click his other finger and cause the rope to harden and cause ice spikes to "emerge" from the area that surrounds the opponent and impale them.
    -Must be from Yuki Clan.
    -Must have mastered Ice release.
    -Usable three times per battle.
    -No s rank ice and above on the same turn.

    X-Both Declined-X Very vague descriptions, not that i mind. I'd check 10 times if i need to understand properly, but text based RP needs proper explanation of moves. It would be a hindrance during battles.

    Hyouton: Handanryoku (Ice Release: Pillars of Judgment)*
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid range*
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: *The user first performs three hand seals and causes 4 pillars of ice to emerge from The ground or be created around the opponent(s). The pillars are arranged so that they form a parallelogram with point A(left of opponent) 6 meters away from point B(right of opponent) and point A 4 meters away from point C(back left of opponent) and point D like point C but from B, the user then performs another hand seal and causes ice to emerge from the pillars and connect to the other points so a parm is made(Ice does not cover the ground nut it covers the "roof" and there are no diagonals) the ice that emerges from the pillars are from inside reflective like a mirror and from the outside are similar to this found in investigation rooms so the user can see his opponent while they are inside but the opponent can only see his reflection, this technique serve as a capturing technique. More techniques related to it will be added like "Sin", "Slice" etc*
    -Usable four times per battle.
    -Lasts until destroyed or escaped from.
    -No S rank ice on same and next turn.

    X-Approved-X Additional techniques may or may not be approved, that's given.

    Note when I say more techs related will be added I mean in a another submission if this gets approved*




    X-Pending-X Leaving for someone else

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    (Fuin Merodīāto Genjutsu: Kaichou no Shingai) Sealing Melody Art Illusionary Technique: Melody’s Terror
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This is a very advanced sealing and illusionary technique which requires a great deal of chakra and concentrating. The user will begin by unrolling a scroll and spill some blood on it, and then activate it with a single hand seal. As a result a very loud and screaming kind of melody will be played from the scroll and everyone listening to it will be caught in the illusion. Inside the illusion the user has full control of the environment, and can create any sound to distract the opponent from water rushing towards in to the scream of hundreds warriors. Each sound that the user wants to be produced will be seen by the opponent as if it was real, so basically the opponent can “hear with his eyes”. For example if the user decides the melody to be of rushing water, the opponent will see a water attack coming at him while in reality nothing will happen. The user can also eliminate the melody of his real techniques that come outside the illusion, preventing the opponent from seeing his real attack, that way the user can decide what and what not can the opponent see.
    ~The melody that produces the illusion will last for only three turns. This technique due to it’s sealing nature does not require the original Melody Art technique to be activated, thus the restrictions to it does not apply. After use the user can not use any fuin techniques for 2 turns as well as any illusionary techniques for 1 turn. The technique can only be broken if the seal is destroyed or if the opponent inflicts a great deal of pain in his ears.

    I have permission from Zero Kelvin to submit a Melody Art custom.

    X-Declined-X
    -Show the permission
    -Woudn't this be summoning more then sealing?
    (Kuchiyose Merodīāto Genjutsu: Kaichou no Shingai) Summoning Melody Art Illusionary Technique: Melody’s Terror
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This is a very advanced illusionary technique which requires a great deal of chakra and concentrating. The user will put some blood in a scrool, and with a single hand seall, it will activate it. . As a result a very loud and screaming kind of melody will be played from the scroll and everyone listening to it will be caught in the illusion. Inside the illusion the user has full control of the environment, and can create any sound to distract the opponent from water rushing towards in to the scream of hundreds warriors. Each sound that the user wants to be produced will be seen by the opponent as if it was real, so basically the opponent can “hear with his eyes”. For example if the user decides the melody to be of rushing water, the opponent will see a water attack coming at him while in reality nothing will happen. The user can also eliminate the melody of his real techniques that come outside the illusion, preventing the opponent from seeing his real attack, that way the user can decide what and what not can the opponent see.
    ~The melody that produces the illusion will last for only three turns. This technique due to it’s summoning nature does not require the original Melody Art technique to be activated, thus the restrictions to it does not apply. After use the user can not use any summoning techniques for 2 turns as well as any illusionary techniques for 1 turn. The technique can only be broken if the seal is destroyed or if the opponent inflicts a great deal of pain in his ears.

    Permission from Zero Kelvin ^_^

    X-Declined-X OPED

    (Genjutsu: Nemui)-Illusionary Technique: Feeling Sleepy
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Descrption: A very simple and extremely quick genjutsu. By sending chakra to the opponent's brain, the user can depress the central nervous system of the human body, placing the opponent into several states such as, tranquility, relaxation, sleepiness, slowed breathing etc. In other words the opponent will feel sleepy and start yawing. The purpose of this jutsu is to steal a very small time from the opponent to prepare an attack (a yawn last for 2 to 4 seconds), and since this jutsu doesn't exatcly hurt the opponent or put him/her to sleep, theres no need to use Kai or inflict pain to him/her self as he won’t be able to realize this is an illiusion (after all a yawn is something very common and simple)
    ~Can only be used 3 times per battle and the user must wait a turn before reusing.

    X-Approved-X reduced the rank to C. And keep in consideration that in the heat of battle, yawns are pretty strange. Opponent might realize as soon as he yawns



    (Genjutsu: Itami no Kai) Illusionary Technique: Pain Release

    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A self-inflicted illusionary technique that is used after the user has been placed under genjutsu.. The user will insert his chakra into his own body and around a specific place, like a body part (leg, arm) or even organ. The purpose of the chakra is to create pain in the desired location. The receptors in the inflicted part will immediately send impulses towards the brain as if the pain was real. The result of this being, the user had broken the opponent’s illusion.
    ~The technique can only be used 2 times per battle to brake any illiusions up to A rank including, or it can be used to brake 1 S ranked illiusion, if that's the case the technique can only be used once.. The user can not use any other illusionary techniques at the same turn and must wait at least 1 turn to reuse this technique. This technique can not break MS illiusions.

    X-Declined-X How is this an illusion?
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    ( Oumu no Jutsu: Shorei ) Parrot Style: Message

    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: Short (on summoning the feather)/Long (on transmission)
    Chakra Cost: 10
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Similar to a summoning technique, this allows the user to summon and vanish a feather from any parrot in Altorio. The feather will be attached to it's owner by chakra, allowing the user to charge chakra through the feather that will be felt by the owner, and the other way around as long as the feather is in the user's possession. Through a common understanding, the different intensities of the chakra information or frequency of information allows messages to be sent through any distance.
    *With this I claim rights to the idea behind this technique, reserving to myself the permission for other Bird Summoning Contracts to create their version of Message. Rights for hair (Mammal Contracts) and Scales (Reptile and Piscis Contracts). If other users find a different part to use, I claim no rights as I can't think of them by myself*
    *It transfers just a signal, a small fluctuation. It is neither able to break someone from a genjutsu or block an attack like Minato's technique. It's like morse code. It's purpose is the same as morse code, being a form of primitive communication.*


    Approved
    Based on Parrot Style: Message

    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Toppi Shitei ) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Coco Macaque

    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: Short (summoning the Larvae) / Long (On transmission)
    Chakra Cost: 10
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Allows the user to summon and vanish a pair of Coco Macaque. These Larvae are all linked together by chakra, so much that by charging chakra through one will be felt by the others. The user of this technique will summon a larvae on him/herself, and the other on any Box short range from the user, allowing the user to charge chakra through the Coco Macaque that will be felt by the Box, and the other way around as long as the larvae are in the user's and targeted Box's possession. Through a common understanding, the different intensities of the chakra information or frequency of information allows messages to be sent through any distance.
    *With this I claim rights to the idea behind this technique, reserving to myself the permission for other Contract's larvae/planaria/infant stage. If other users find a different part to use, I claim no rights as I can't think of them by myself*
    *It transfers just a signal, a small fluctuation. It is neither able to break someone from a genjutsu or block an attack like Minato's technique. It's like morse code. It's purpose is the same as morse code, being a form of primitive communication.*
    *Coco Macaque twins can stay indefinitely in the battle, but there are only 4 pairs of twins in Archipelago (per contract holder)*
    *Can be used by other Boxes*
    *These larvae can't use jutsus*

    X-Declined-X Similar to Slugs isn't it? Although we can differ between larvae and slugs but we cant have you claim anything nor allow a technique thats so similar. Feathers on the other hand was fine

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    ( Oumou Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Vó Gidja ) Parrot Summoning Jutsus: Vó Gidja

    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Vó Gidga is an elderly parakeet, with white and gray body and exuberant silver plumage, twice the size of a large Altorio parrot. She is a powerful chakra sensor, and mastered to the max the Message and the Monkey Chase jutsu. She is incapable of using Ninjutsu other than Parrot Arts, for she chose to master her mental faculties.
    Mental Link: She is able to open lines of dialog with any parrot or contract signer, regardless of distance.
    Likewise, she is linked to any Message or Monkey Chase used by any human or parrot.
    Chakra Sensor: She is able to sense everything around herself for up to 100 meters. Motionless, she can increase that to a kilometer. To do so in a battle, it counts as a jutsu. Using a Message from her feathers will allow her to sense everything 50 meters around, or, motionless, 500 meters.
    Genjutsu Proficiency: She is able to fight using Genjutsu, and is quite proficient at it, allowing her to cast genjutsus one range higher (without changing the cost or damage).
    In battle, she is able to fight for 4 turns before vanishing. She can be summoned once. Outside an actual battle, she can be summoned for long periods of time, as long as she keeps motionless.
    Summoning her to the field allows the user additional damage points to any genjutsu technique, translating in stronger or less discernible techniques (+10 damage points)

    Approved Contract

    X-Declined-X Remove the part where it increases the range of Genjutsu, rest is fine.
    ( Oumou Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Vó Gidja ) Parrot Summoning Jutsus: Vó Gidja

    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Vó Gidga is an elderly parakeet, with white and gray body and exuberant silver plumage, twice the size of a large Altorio parrot. She is a powerful chakra sensor, and mastered to the max the Message and the Monkey Chase jutsu. She is incapable of using Ninjutsu other than Parrot Arts, for she chose to master her mental faculties.
    Mental Link: She is able to open lines of dialog with any parrot or contract signer, regardless of distance.
    Likewise, she is linked to any Message or Monkey Chase used by any human or parrot.
    Chakra Sensor: She is able to sense everything around herself for up to 100 meters. Motionless, she can increase that to a kilometer. To do so in a battle, it counts as a jutsu. Using a Message from her feathers will allow her to sense everything 50 meters around, or, motionless, 500 meters.
    Genjutsu Proficiency: She is able to fight using Genjutsu, and is quite proficient at it.
    In battle, she is able to fight for 4 turns before vanishing. She can be summoned once. Outside an actual battle, she can be summoned for long periods of time, as long as she keeps motionless.
    Summoning her to the field allows the user additional damage points to any genjutsu technique, translating in stronger or less discernible techniques (+10 damage points)

    Note: Removed the increase of the range (Pointing it out because there was nothing to bold xD)

    ______________
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    Your parrot can have a sensing ability but not a chakra sensing ability. You have to find some alternative sensing technique that hasn't been done before or isn't common enough to collide with anything. Also, why would this parrot increase the strength of your genjutsu? Just by being there and being a sensor? Nothing happens just "because".

    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Utsu ) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Shango

    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: Shango are a specialized type of Box Jellyfishes that are able to hybernate underground, masking their chakra completely to chakra sensors, until a foreign chakra steps within their close vincinity. Once it happens, they quickly lash out at their prey, shooting their thread-like tentacles and wraping around the opponent, carving the skin and injecting their poison. This happens in a blink of an eye, slightly faster than Gaara's sand defense. They're trap-summons, and, upon preforming 6 handseals, they're summoned into the ground anywhere within range. Although able to stay indefinetly on the field, they are short lived after being triggered (1 turn).
    *Can only summon up to 4 per usage*
    *Can only use 2 times per battle*
    *Can't be summoned already in the direct vinincity of any opponent (right beneath their feet).
    *Can only use Box Arts*
    *Triggering a Shango does not count towards the user's jutsu count*
    *Foreign chakra is anything outside the Box Contract, as such, it will not react to fellow summons or summoners (even if used by different members), but will react to allies*
    *Triggering reacts by pressure and chakra, trying to detect living animal organisms, thus, unless the jutsu mimics animal life (Shadow Clones, Organic Elemental Clones, Summon Animals) it won't get triggered*
    *User can't preform any other summon in the same and next turn*

    X-Both Pending-X Leaving for someone else

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    This is not very reasonable taking into account the properties of your summons. You basically create tiny, undetectable poison mines... Faster than gaara's defense, long range, 4 at a time, ability to use box arts, etc etc. and the ability to trigger only on living things, not clones or techniques... Too much. Don't forget the link to the box contract.
     
         
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    Genjutsu - Illusionary Arts |Doki - Wrath
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 [-20 to the user]
    Description: Utilizing large amount of chakra in one's body, the user creates an illusion where the opponent enters a whole new terrain. The terrain is best described as the "Underworld". Pitch darkness and the eyes of the unknown surround the user as two large spears tied with chains on the ground impale the opponent's arms and restrict movement. As the spear pierces the hands, the opponent is enveloped by unbearable pain and gets launched into the steel cross hanging on the wall. The opponent doesn't get time to react to the velocity of the chained spears and get's sure to be hit. When steel cross hits the opponent's body, he is knocked semi-conscious.

    Note: Can only be used once.
    The user is unable to use S-Rank or Higher genjutsu for the rest of the battle.
    The user needs to keep a constant "Snake" handseal while the opponent is under the genjutsu and is unable to use any other handseal requiring techniques while executing it.
    As a post traumatic effect of the strong genjutsu, the opponent is unable to utilize his arms for one turn.

    X-Declined-X Multitude of reasons: name of an exsiting technique, similar to an existing custom technique, oped.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Genjutsu:Gen'ei Zai|Illusion Release:Illusion of Medicine
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra:40
    Damage:N/A
    Description:This jutsu is a Genjutsu that is to be used on your own teammate or himself. It rids the target of pain, caused from any external injury. This does not actually heal them in any way,it is just an anesthetic.

    -Usable 3 times per battle
    -No Genjutsu in the same turn
    -Only Taught/Usable by Igneel

    Genjutsu:Seiryoku Genzou|Illusion Release:Forced Vision
    Rank: C
    Type:Supplementary
    Chakra:15
    Damage:N/A
    Range:Short-Mid
    Description:This is a strategic visual genjutsu.This jutsu will cause an opponent to think that their eyes have been constantly open and that they cannot blink, almost like their vision is phasing through their eyelids.This causes the opponent to cry, reducing their ability to see.A small sense of irritation is felt as their eyes will start to dry out.This jutsu can be used as a means to distract the opponent.

    -Doesn't affect doujutsu
    -Only Usable/Taught by Igneel

    X-Both Declined-X I stopped last night to think about this particularly, and i wont classify these as Genjutsu. Because the basic idea of gen is 'fooling' senses which is being extended to 'forcing actions' over senses here.

    Raiton:Ion Ryuushi|Lightning Release:Ion Particles
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:30
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user does the seal of confrontation,releasing raiton chakra in the form of ions.These ions clusters up the air around the battleground.The main purpose of these ion's is that they can be used as a means to transmit jutsu's over greater ranges.As such all raiton jutsu's range increases and it follows the order,
    Short Range-Mid Range
    Mid Range-Long Range
    Long Range remains Long Range

    -Lasts 3 turns
    -Range cannot be increased for jutsu's like chidori
    -Usable twice
    -Opponent cannot use the ion's to increase the range of his raiton jutsu as it is filled with user's chakra
    -Doesn't power up the raiton jutsu that the user uses
    -No wind jutsu as long as the particles are active
    -Only doujutsu can see the ions
    -Usable/Taught by Igneel

    X-Declined-X Potential to be exploited much more then just increasing range of lightning techniques.
     
         
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    Raiton Ketsuretsu Genkotsu|Lightning Breakdown Fist
    Type: Offensice
    Rank: A
    Range: Short- Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user gathers a large amount of lightning around one of his fists and makes a punching motion at the target from which an oversized version of his fist, completely composed of lightning, is generated(which is about as large as the user himself) and rapidly fired towards the target.
    Note: Usable thrice
    Only taught by Danzo Auditore De Firenze

    X-Approved-X Changes bolded
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ao-sama
    (Suiton: Mizurappa Shippuu) - Water Release: Violent Water Wave Hurricane
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: Water gushes out from the mouth like a waterfall and is manipulated to form a small water hurricane that surrounds the user, washing away the enemy at close quarters.
    Restrictions: Usable only once per battle.

    Link to approval: [click here]
    Suiton: Mizurappa Shippuu | Water Release: Violent Water Wave Hurricane
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: Water gushes out from the mouth like a waterfall and is manipulated to form a small water hurricane that surrounds the user, washing away the enemy at close quarters.

    Note: Can only be taught by Kārin.

    *Changes: Usable only once per battle is changed to Note: Can only be taught by Kārin.




    Resubmitting Update

    Quote Originally Posted by Ao-sama
    (Fukusuu Taka Dageki no Jutsu) - Multiple Falcon Strike Technique
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: User forces chakra flow to muscles and joints in the arm allowing user to perform several rapid strikes in quick succession.
    Restrictions: Usable only with Kame Raikou Ken and once per battle.

    Link to approval: [click here]
    Fukusuu Taka Dageki no Jutsu | Multiple Falcon Strike Technique
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: User forces chakra flow to muscles and joints in the arm allowing user to perform several rapid strikes in quick succession.

    Note: Must use with a sword, katana, or tanto.
    Note: Can only be taught by Kārin



    *Changes: Usable only with Kame Raikou Ken & only once per battle is changed to Note: Must use with a sword, katana, or Tanto & Note: Can only be taught by Kārin.


    X-Both Approved-X Bold the changes next time please. Check the bolded edits.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Link of contract approval:
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...58#post8871158

    And submitted in:
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...05#post8989105
    Quote Originally Posted by Seblax View Post
    Kuchyose No Jutsu: Gitasura No Sono Shinku Sangaku -Summoning Technique: Gitasura of The Crimson Mountains

    Type: Defensive/Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: -
    Description: The user wipes blood on his fan and charges it with a huge amount of chakra. Then he swings it and summons a 4-meter-long-vulture with 5-Meter-long-wings. This creature is the guardian of the empire's borders around the volcanic mountains. It has four huge wings, two arms and two mouths on its beak. Gatisura could use up to A rank fire element techniques of the techniques the user know. He is great at transporting and unlike many of the vultures he is friendly.
    -Can only be summoned once.
    -Must have the vulture contract and mastered up to A rank of the fire element to be able to form this summoning.

    X-Declined-X Well everything is fine, but how long does it last?

    Link of contract approval:
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...58#post8871158

    And submitted in:
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    Kuchyose No Jutsu: Gitasura No Sono Shinku Sangaku -Summoning Technique: Gitasura of The Crimson Mountains

    Type: Defensive/Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: -
    Description: The user wipes blood on his fan and charges it with a huge amount of chakra. Then he swings it and summons a 4-meter-long-vulture with 5-Meter-long-wings. This creature is the guardian of the empire's borders around the volcanic mountains. It has four huge wings, two arms and two mouths on its beak. Gatisura could use up to A rank fire element techniques of the techniques the user know. He is great at transporting and unlike many of the vultures he is friendly.
    -Can only be summoned once.
    -Must have the vulture contract and mastered up to A rank of the fire element to be able to form this summoning.
    -Last for 4 turns then disappear back.

    Kuchyose No Jutsu: Qusura No Koubai-Kuro Sawa -Summoning Technique: Qusura of The Pitch-Black Valley

    Type: Defensive/Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: -
    Description: The user wipes blood on his fan and charges it with a huge amount of chakra. Then he swings it and summons a black 5-meter-long-vulture with 6-Meter-long-wings. This creature is the guardian of the empire's southern borders with the valley of the black stones. It has four huge wings, two arms very thick feathers for they were covered with mud and does soil, Qusura could use up to A rank earth element techniques of the techniques the user know. He is great at transporting and unlike many of the vultures he is friendly. he has the ability of using the soil and mud which is contained in his feather to use some earth jutsus from his body if possible.

    -Can only be summoned once.
    -Must have the vulture contract and mastered up to A rank of the earth element to be able to form this summoning.
    -Last for 4 turns then disappear back.

    X-Both Approved-X

    Quote Originally Posted by Seblax View Post
    Kuchyose No Jutsu: Trisura, Gogyou shikaku-Summoning Technique: Trisura, The Aqu-A-ssassin-
    Type: Defensive/Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: -
    Description: The user wipes blood on his fan and charges it with a huge amount of chakra. Then he swings it and summons a 4-meter-long-vulture with 5-Meter-long-wings. This creature is the protector of the borders of the Vulture empire has with the sea. It has two huge wings, a long tail, webbing between its large toes and the ability to hold its breathe for a very long time to help it swim and dive. Trisura could use up to A rank water element techniques of the techniques the user know. She is great at transporting and unlike many of the vultures she is friendly.

    -Can only be summoned once.
    -Can only use one A rank water jutsu every three turns.
    -Can only remain on the battle field for 4 turns.
    -Vulture must wait a turn in order to fly again after it, comes out of water.
    X-Approved-X However i added a restriction, you could have made it more reasonable. Make something up about unique feather attack would easily dry up idk its all your imagination
    Aqu-A-ssassinion - Gogyou shikaku
    Type: Defensive/Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40

    Description: An Advance water technique created by Trisura, the Aqu-A-ssassin of the Empire of Vulture, She created this jutsu out of the need to dry herself after every dive or swim and made it as its fast sneak attack. after getting herself wet, Trisura gets out of the water and close her body inward creating a similar shape of a ball then wave its wings back as it reflect her body to the other side while using her chakra manipulation and water affinity to send all of the water covering its body at all directions in the form of fast raindrops, getting herself dry and attack anyone who is at mid range with her.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Make Trisura able to fly right after a swimming/diving session.
    -Only Trisura or someone who signed the contract can use this technique.
    -Damage anyone at mid range of it including the user.

    X-Approved-X Rank reduced
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Batoidea: Ophelia)- Summoning: Batoidea: Ophelia
    Type: Summon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Ophelia is the weapons expert of the Stingrays and thus focuses heavily on close range prowess. She has the looks of an small sized Eagle Stingray being only a meter long (not including tail length) with a wingspan of a meter 1/2 and is sandy yellow in colour with white spots. Despite not having a humanoid body to perform punches and kicks, she makes up for it through a unique moveset. Ophelia’s first ability is what allows her to overcome her lack of limbs to wield weapons. Ophelia is capable of freely growing Stingray stingers from all over her body, and is also capable of applying shape manipulation to the stingers so as to create various weapons of all different shapes and sizes. These stingers have the strength slightly greater than that of a Kunai. She is also capable of growing much more powerful chakra or elemental chakra enhanced stingers which is equivalent in strength to an A ranked jutsu, the stingers can also be retracted or shot if need be. Ophelia’s second ability is what truly allows her to shine in close range combat, and also earned her nickname; Rippling Ophelia. By channeling chakra to her body and reverberating it within while also utilizing her exceptional body control, she is capable of undulating her body, or parts of her body at high speeds creating an optical illusion where her body appears to be rippling. This effectively makes it exceptionally hard for her opponent to block as they will be unable to gauge exactly where Ophelia will strike, although they can gauge the rough vicinity in which she will strike and thus attempt to dodge using “wide dodges”. This allows her to overpower her enemies in close quarters combat by continuously forcing them to make large dodges by relentlessly following up each attack with a new one, preventing counter-attacks since the opponent will have to waste their movements on dodging. Thus it becomes a waiting game of when the opponent will either tire out, or make a dodge that he can’t recover from in time to dodge her next attack. This optical illusion can only be slowed down to trackable speeds by a Mangekyou Sharingan. The venom on Ophelia’s grown stingers aren’t the most potent, but are still quite deadly. Five senbon sized stingers being able to easily incapacitate a limb while causing the opponent minor heart rate and breathing problems such as lack of breath, and minute cramping like pains within the chest region.

    Note:
    - Ophelia can only be summoned once per battle and stays on the field for four turns.
    - Growing elemental enhanced Stingers or enhancing already grown stingers counts as a move and has a maximum of five uses.
    - Her rippling effect can only be activated once per battle and last for two turns.
    - Ophelia is capable of both swimming and flying through the air.

    Signed the Batoidea contract

    X-Declined-X
    -One element per summong (Hint hint!: Collaboration ninjutsu with summoning creatures)
    -Second Ability needs to be a seperate technique usable by Ophelia (likewise it should not be oped)
    Resubmitting;

    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Batoidea: Ophelia)- Summoning: Batoidea: Ophelia
    Type: Summon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Ophelia is the weapons expert of the Stingrays and thus focuses heavily on close range prowess. She has the looks of an small sized Eagle Stingray being only a meter long (not including tail length) with a wingspan of a meter 1/2 and is sandy yellow in colour with white spots. Despite not having a humanoid body to perform punches and kicks, she makes up for it through a unique moveset. Ophelia’s first ability is what allows her to overcome her lack of limbs to wield weapons. Ophelia is capable of freely growing Stingray stingers from all over her body, and is also capable of applying shape manipulation to the stingers so as to create various weapons of all different shapes and sizes. These stingers have the strength slightly greater than that of a Kunai. She is also capable of growing much more powerful wind elemental chakra enhanced stingers which is equivalent in strength to an S ranked jutsu, also, the user by performing the "Dragon" handseal can release either their Doton/Katon/Raiton or Suiton chakra into Ophelia as she grows her stingers, acting as a collaboration technique so as to allow Ophelia to grow Doton/Katon/Raiton or Suiton enhanced stingers equivalent to A rank, although they need to be within short range of Ophelia to do so. The stingers can also be retracted or shot if need be. The venom on Ophelia’s grown stingers aren’t the most potent, but are still quite deadly. Five senbon sized stingers being able to easily incapacitate a limb while causing the opponent minor heart rate and breathing problems such as lack of breath, and minute cramping like pains within the chest region.

    Note:
    - Ophelia can only be summoned once per battle and stays on the field for four turns.
    - Growing elemental enhanced Stingers or enhancing already grown stingers counts as a move and has a maximum of five uses.
    - Ophelia is capable of both swimming and flying through the air.
    - Ophelia's Electroreception spans out to Mid range through water or air.

    Signed the Batoidea contract


    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Batoidea: Achilles) | Summoning: Batoidea: Achilles
    Type: Summon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Achilles is a small sized slate gray coloured Ray roughly three meters long (not including tail length which is 2 meters long). Achilles is summoned onto the users back, and quickly begins to morph into an armour that covers the entirety of the users body, being layered on top of their clothes and bending around and beneath tools such as sword sheaths and ninja pouches. The armour fits much like a spandex, or jumpsuit, clinging to the users body rather firmly, acting like an extension of the users body or a second skin rather than an actual armour. Of course the armour allows free use of facial expressions, sight and speech. Achilles's tail however remains in its original form, and extends outwards from the armour at the area near the users coccyx, while two wing like Ray pectoral fins extend outwards from the users shoulder blade area, generally dropping downwards towards the ground, but can also be used for flight or high speed underwater movement much like a Ray. The armour reacts to the users intentions as Achilles shares a mental link with the user. Achilles's abilities lie within his unique skin that's lined with an excessive amount of rather large dermal denticles. Which also makes the armour a great defensive tool, thanks to its resistance to electrical currents and cutting based attacks while the denticles themselves also increase the offensive ability of the user by adding a flaying like cutting effect to physical attacks. Achilles's first ability makes use of his rather pronounced dermal denticles, or placoid scales that are constantly covered and enhanced with his wind nature chakra. When the user moves, the denticles create tiny vortices of wind that help to reduce drag, allowing the user to move faster. However this also has an offensive application, as when the user launches an attack at the opponent, such as a punch, the vortexes produced act as an extension the users body so that even if the opponent avoids, or the user misses, the opponent will still be hit, and sliced by the abundance of near invisible vortices produced by Achilles's denticles. Generally the vortexes of moving air produced by the dermal denticles create a perimeter of about three inches around the users body, however underwater this ability is much more pronounced, creating a perimeter of roughly six inches. A particularly vigilant opponent under the right conditions may be able to notice the slight wind currents bending around the users body, however it's generally incredibly hard to spot. Achilles's second ability also lies within his skin, Achilles's is capable of changing his skin colour rapidly so as to blend in with the environment, much like a Yellow Stingray, however on a much higher level. This acts similar to the Camouflage Concealment Technique and effectively allows the user to become near invisible at will. The armour also enhances the use of attacks like "Hardliner Revolving Cut" to the extent that it would be capable of clashing with and neutralizing Raikiri variants (+1 Ranks). This is because the denticles increase the potency of the wind coating the users appendages thanks to their innate flaying like shredding effect and their vorticy effect. As aforementioned Achilles's is responsive to the users will, therefore the armour can quickly unravel from parts of the users body, allowing attacks to freely pass through.

    Note:
    - Achilles can stay on the field for 4 turns.
    - Achilles can only be summoned Once per Battle.
    - Achilles's Electroreception spans out to Mid range through water or air.
    - Achilles is capable of protecting the user from A rank and below cutting attacks and A rank and below electrical currents. However the user will still be susceptible to the force of the attacks, which can result in fractured ribs, broken bones, ect, although the armour is capable of protecting the user from moderate force. He is capable of withstanding two of these attacks before his defense crumbles.
    - The user activating the camoflauge ability counts as a move, however after initial activation it can be used on will without cost.
    - Placoid Scales/Dermal Dentacles, are enamel tooth like structures that cover the entirety of cartilligeous fishes such as Rays, Sharks and Skates body. Dermal Denticles is the reason why rubbing a shark the wrong way can result in your hand being flayed to bits. They also help the Shark or Ray to swim faster as the vortices reduce drag.

    Signed the Batoidea contract

    ♠ Leaving for Scorps or Xylon as I am not sure if such abilities for a summon is allowed. ♠

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    ±± Both Declined ±±
    Its too much stacked into summons, specially the last one...keep it more reasonable please.
     
         
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    (Tsuchi to mizu no sutairu combonation: Oboreru no *******) Earth and Water Style Combonation: Temple of Drowning

    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbinned
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description:
    After summoning a clone the user will gather up Doton chakra while the Clone Gathers up Suiton Chakra after both the user and the clone have gathered up their chakra at the same time both will slam there hands on the ground the user creating a Giant Temple of Earth with a large black hole that leads I side the temple in the front of it while the Clone creates a Giant orb of water around the temple trapping the opponent within the orb. As the opponent is trapped the clone will take control of the Suiton chakra inside the orb and cause 4 large arms of water to grab the opponent by their arms and legs pulling them inside the temple and then ripping the opponents limbs off

    Restrictions

    • Can only be used by Roronoa Zoro...
    • Can only be used 1 time per match
    • Can only use B rank and below Earth and Water for 3 turns after this technquie is used
    • The user must have created a clone to use this technquie

    ♠ Declined ♠
    Okay, firstly, your post is hardly understandable. There are tons of English mistakes in it which makes this very unclear to me. Secondly, this jutsu is too unrealistic. You don't state how big the temple is, and just reading the whole thing makes me extremely confused. It lasts way too long to be used rationally. Lastly, this doesn't seem to be a forbidden to me.


    (Mizu rirīsu: Koi-gyo no arashi) Water Release: Storm of Koy Fish

    Type: Attack / Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    The user starts by performing one Handsign and places his hands on the ground and releases his Suiton chakra as he releases the Chakra a pool of water will appear infront of the user as the pool forms 20 Koy fish made out of water will shoot at the opponent the Koy fish are Medium sized and will sworn at the opponent

    Restrictions

    • Usable 3 times a match
    • can only be taught by Roronoa Zoro
    • Can not use S rank Water for 1 full turn after this technquie

    ♠ Declined, do not re-submit ♠
    Do you mean Koi Fish? And sworn at the opponent? Unless you have a summoning contract, I don't see how this is special or useful at all in battles, just a generic attack with water.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    One custom technique for my custom weapon provided below ^^.
    ( Kurikara, The Blue Demon Slayer, Satan's Flame | 紅魔館 青デビ)
    Rank: S
    Type: Att ' Def
    Range: Short.
    Chakra cost: -Up to 40 if used with the special ability.
    Damage points: -Up to 80 if used with the special ability.
    Description: The Kurikara, or Blue Demon slayer, is one of the most powerful sword's of all time. Said to be forged by some of the best Black Smith's known to man. It was also said to have slayed Demon's in ancient times, and that was it's intention. It's blade is made from a special material, that man created from the ground long ago. It's spilled so much blood, including that of a human's. It earn's it's name with the help of both of it's chakra affinity's, Lightning and Fire. This is an elemental combination purely used for techniques that are sharp, but also hot. And due to these two element's being combined, there is a flame to the sword from the fire element, but it turn's blue due to the combined lightning element. It is said that when this sword is unsheathed, it also gives the user a new found strength in their heart's. And upon Unsheathing Satan's Flame, the user will be covered in the lightning/fire chakra around the body.
    Ability's:
    § Blue fire addition: This sharp, and also hot technique allow's the user to cut through A rank wind, and even up to A rank Doton techniques. Now you know by now what it would do to a humans body.
    § Satan's Flame: Once Unsheathed, the blue flame will cover your body, and it has to accept you. It will cover the outside area of the body (Around the clothing also) and there will be two flames above your head that look like horns. This technique protect's you from D-Rank Wind techniques and D-Rank Doton. But between using this Technique and any other ability's for Satan's flame, it will have to be used alone, and after being used you will have to wait two turn's before using another technique for it. The sword's blade will still be covered in the blue flame, it just can't cut through Doton/Fuuton at the time.
    § Heart: Once unsheathed, the user will feel more powerful. Although the user gains no extra physical ability's, his fighting will grows in his heart. And this can make anyone more powerful through the mind.
    Koumaken:

    Koumaken:


    Satan's Flame:





    Limit's on element cutting:
    B rank: Three times per battle, if used once already can only cut up to one more A rank or B rank.
    C rank: Can also be cut three times, and if cut twice can still cut one A-Rank.
    -And the same from C rank goes for D and E rank's.


    ♠ Leaving for Scorps or Xylon. ♠

    (Kurikara, Aoi honō no gūru | 青い炎のグール)
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: A highly advanced technique of the Kurikara. This is only possible once the blade is unsheathed and Satan's flame is activated. The user will plant the blue fire covered blade into the ground, whilst manifesting his own chakra into the Kurikara. Once a good amount of your chakra has been sacrificed (40), the blade will then go dull for a short moment as the user let's go. Seemingly as though it was a pointless effort. Then the user will let go of the blades tsuka just before it releases a massive burst of blue flames into the sky. The flames will accumulate and form 5 to 10 giant ghost shaped figures. These ghoul's are controlled by the user and have all of the same properties of Satan's Flame. Lastly they can be used to crash into anything and explode in a diameter equal to three bomb kunai.
    ► Can be used once per-battle.
    ► The Kurikara is unable to perform any other techniques for the next turn.
    ► Lasts 4 turns.


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    ±± Declined ±±
    Similar to exiting techniques.

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    (Fūton: Eabāsuto) - Wind Style: Air Burst
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack-Defense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will knead a large amount of wind chakra throughout the entire body, as he/she claps their hands together resulting in a massive burst of cutting wind surrounding the body over a large perimeter. There are no weak spots surrounding the air burst which allow's it to be a great defense mechanism for in-coming attacks. The burst does start from the body itself expanding it's range to mid in an instant.
    Note: Usable twice per-battle.

    ♠ Declined, do not re-submit ♠
    It reminds me too much of the C-Rank Wind canon jutsu, and on the other hand, extremely repetitive and not unique as a custom jutsu submission.

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    (Doton: Shirindā Shīrudo) - Earth Style: Cylinder Shield
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user performs the bird handseal whilst kneading earth chakra throughout the body and into the ground below. Almost immediately a cylinder of earth will emerge from the ground completely surrounding the user at 360 degree's, acting as the ultimate shield. The cylinder is very tall at 10ft above the head line, though there is a circular opening at the top for easy escape. By clapping your hands together this shield can be pushed outward up to mid range in order to push away any threats.
    Note: Usable once per-battle.
    Note: Must have mastered the earth element.
    ♠ Declined ♠
    I need to know approximately how fast this expands outwards.
    Also, isn't this a bit troublesome to the user itself? You're basically surrounding yourself with Earth on all sides and dissuading vision of your opponent.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Knightmare Frame (Naitomea furēmu)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid - Long
    Chakra: 30 (-20 per turn active)
    Damage: 60 (+20 to raiton jutsu)
    Description: The user will focus his chakra to a ring, perform 3 hand seals, and summon a huge golden armor. This armor is 10 meters tall. Inside the armor's head, there is a small piloting room. After endering the room, the user will start channeling lighting chakra to the armor, controlling it's movements as if it was his own. The user can see from the eyes of the armor, which are in fact windows. The armor is constantly enveloped with raiton, and will dispel doton chakra aimed at it or below it's feet up to S rank.
    -When using the armor, the user can only use raiton jutsu, as he is constantly channeling raiton to the armor.
    -When using a jutsu, the chakra is channeled through the armor, so it is as if the armor is using it. The size of the jutsu is also amplified to the size of the armor.

    [Link to approval of CFS]
    ♠ Declined ♠
    First off, I don't see how your CFS has ANYTHING to do with this jutsu. Unless you can properly explain how it does, then this will not be everoved. Secondly, it can't dispel Earth chakra up to S-Rank, that's a bit too much. Lastly, a huge armor? You really want to be bottled up in such a thing and let your opponent take an easy target at you? Change it to short range and you can't boost the power of your jutsus with such an armor.


    (Tegatana: Furashu Ken) Hand-sword: Flash Sword
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (-30 to user)
    Description: The Tegatana user will focus lighting chakra to his tegatana, which he can then extend up to mid range in front of him (in a straight line). The chakra is invisible to the naked eye (except the chakra enveloping the hand directly), but the opponent can hear a sound similar to the sound the chidori produces. As the chakra comes in contact with a target, a huge lighting bolt will flash for the duration of the blink of an eye from the hand of the tegatana user till the end of the blade. The sheer power of the lighting will cause an explosion, and the user will be hit by a shockwave propelling his body backwards and damaging him severally.
    -Usable twice per battle, once for each hand.
    -Usage will give the hand used with first degree burns.
    -User is unable to use raiton higher than B rank during the next turn

    ♠ Declined ♠
    No description as to exactly how wide the tetagana is. Is it a simple straight line of chakra that needs to be aimed? Secondly, no, you can not make this invisible to the naked eye.
    Also, you can only use this once.


    Zeus Authority (Zeus Kyoku)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30 (+20 chakra per jutsu) (+10 per turn to keep it active)
    Damage: N/A (+20 to raiton)
    Description: To use this Jutsu, the user will start emitting a bluish raiton aura. The user's hair will become wight, and he will instantly grow a wight beard. The user will then release raiton chakra particles to the atmosphere, and then ionize it till long range from him. When the user uses Raiton within the ionised atmosphere, the raiton particles will enhance the power of Raiton jutsu used by the user by +20 damage due to the fact that the raiton particles have his chakra signature, and will only enhance his jutsu. Also, within the field of the jutsu, wind jutsu become neutral to raiton, as the wind is ionized. However, this comes with a catch, as the user will be unable to use any other chakra nature for the duration of the jutsu, due to giving this much stress to raiton, and doing so would make the raiton particles disappear. The jutsu lasts 5 turns, and after it wears off, the user will be exhausted and able to use only 2 jutsu per turn for next 3 turns.
    -Wile using this jutsu, the user can only use raiton chakra transformation, or he would end the jutsu.
    -The raiton within the atmosphere makes it dangerous for both parties to use suiton jutsu, as even contact of suiton chakra with the ionised atmosphere will shock the user and stun him.
    -Due to raiton consuming more chakra than other natures, and the grand scale of it, the user will be drained of 1/3 of his total chakra by the end of the jutsu.
    -Usable only once per battle and lasts for 5 turns.
    -User is unable to perform any S-rank and above techs for next 2 turns after the jutsu ends. Also, no Raiton above B rank for the next turn after the jutsu ends.
    -User is left exhausted and thus only able to move within his short range for 1 turn after the jutsu ends.

    ♠ Declined, do not re-submit ♠
    What is wight first of all?
    Second of all, way too OP, I don't think I need to explain why. It's unrealistic, and kind of interferes with Gobi's pride over his hair and beard.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Raiton: Fujō Raito no Tanjō| Lightning Release: Birth of the Unholy Lights
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will focus lightning chakra into the ground and then cause multiple lightning pillars capable of impaling a summon as large as Gamabunta to erupt forcefully and rapidly from the ground. This technique is similar to the Destructive Rising Earth Pillars, but it is not earth but lightning, and has pointed edges that can deal more damage and since it is lightning, it can numb the target.
    -These lightning pillars cannot charge water to create a water/lightning combo.
    -Can only be used 4 times.
    -Can only be thought by Naizen

    X-Declined-X OPED
    Raiton: Fujō Raito no Tanjō| Lightning Release: Birth of the Unholy Lights
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will focus lightning chakra into the ground and then cause multiple lightning pillars capable of impaling a summon as large as Gamabunta to erupt forcefully and rapidly from the ground. This technique is similar to the Destructive Rising Earth Pillars, but it is not earth but lightning, and has pointed edges that can deal more damage and since it is lightning, it can numb the target.
    -These lightning pillars cannot charge water to create a water/lightning combo.
    -Can only be used 3 times.
    -Can only be taught by Naizen

    X-Declined-X That didn't helped, rank wasn't an issue. I could've raised it myself.

    Doton: Wazawai ​​ gai no Tsubasa| Earth Release: Wings of Disaster
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack|Supplementary|Defence
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40(+5 per turn to keep each bird active)
    Damage Points: N/A(80 if target is hit)
    Description: This technique enables the user to create birds as huge as the size of a standard airplane from the earth. After waiving a string of 6 handseals, the user claps his/her hands together and a monstrous earth bird rises from the ground, leaving a massive crater in the groud. The number of claps determines the number of birds that would be created. Due to the size, up to 15 people can stay on it comfortably. Any bird formed is capable of firing cannon balls from it's mouth or spikes from it's wings by flapping them; cannon balls and spikes are equivalent to B rank earth techniques.
    -Cannon balls or spikes count towards the users 3 jutsus.
    -Can only create a maximum of 3 birds per use(i.e three claps).
    -1 bird can be destroyed using 3 A rank or 2 S rank or 1 F rank technique.
    -Birds remain active in battle until destroyed.
    -User cannot use any earth technique for two turns after all birds are destroyed.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -Can only be taught by Naizen

    X-Declined-X It will fly? O_o

    Fuuton: Rasshu| Wind Release: Rush
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary|Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A(+40 if used with a taijutsu or weapon attack)
    Description: The user channels wind chakra throughout his body and then focuses a large amount to every part of his back(head to sole). Then he pushes it all out at once, releasing and transforming it into a strong stream of wind that propels him forward at an incredible speed trackable by only an MS sharingan.
    -Can only be used to move in a linear direction.
    -Can only be taught by Naizen.

    X-Declined-X Oped & Similar to existing techniques. DNR and you are forbidden to submit any variations of this, elemental or w/e. Rest of the techniques are pending due your turn.
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 01-03-2013 at 07:39 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Suiton: Kyabitēshon | Water Release: Cavitation
    Type: Offense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: Cavitation is a very advanced technique where the user, after performing a single handseal, uses his own chakra to create air pockets in a body of water. The size and number of the pockets, so called cavities, differs from each body of water. After being created the cavities collapse on itself, i.e. implode, under the pressure of the water. When the cavitation bubbles collapse, they force energetic liquid into very small volumes, thereby creating spots of high temperature and emitting shock waves, the latter of which are a source of noise. The implosion effect is so strong that it can easily create holes in metal objects over a prolonged period of time. It also causes instability in the body of water and harm to anything caught within it.
    Note: Needs a water source
    Note: Usable only twice (2) per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this
    ♠Declined ♠
    Some details missing such as exactly how many cavities you can create in a single body of water and I need some more examples as to how the size of the water affects the cavities. It's really hard for me to imagine this.


    Suiton: Chika mizu | Water Release: Subterranean Waters
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Using his own chakra the user can, unbeknownst to his opponent, create a single or multiple water sources within the earth. The water sources can vary in size, depending on the need of the user. They can be from a single drop of water to a human sized pond of water. They don't form too deep in the ground, but about a meter or two beneath the surface. They can be used, afterwards, as a source for water techniques that would attack the opponent from beneath and could also prevent the opponent to go underground.
    Note: Usable only thrice (3) per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this
    ♠ Declined ♠
    Again, another great idea, but I need a limit on the idea on about how large you can make it. "They can be from a single drop of water to a human sized pond of water." Is this the clear limit?
    Also, if your opponent does go underground, you wouldn't be able to detect him either, so not sure how you would utilize that as an attack.
    Lastly, if you were to attack your opponent with such a jutsu, what would be the approximate power of it? More water = more power? Less water = less power? The speed where it comes up from the ground? A lot of details missing if I can't put it to image.
     
         
    Last edited by Adachi; 12-30-2012 at 01:53 PM.

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