Page 108 of 237 « First ... 85898104105106107108109110111112118158208 ... Last»
Results 2,141 to 2,160 of 4737
  1. #2141
    Scaze's Avatar
    Status
    Scaze is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Apr 2011
    Posts
    14,550
    Location
    In ur mum fam
    I'm not inactive. Just
    preoccupied.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Scaze View Post
    Fuuton/Raiton: Gekido Kujo Ika | Lighting Release/Wind Release: Rage of the Cataclysmic Squid
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user spews a stream of condensed lightning that immediately begins to spin at amazingly high speeds. The stream of lightning somewhat resembles the upper body of a squid. The lightning itself is immensely compressed and linear, thus rather than having bolts radiating outwards it takes a spear like form. As aforementioned the lightning spins much like a drill at staggeringly fast speeds, at speeds so fast that it begins to generate hot wind currents around itself. The drill races forth in the released direction at fairly fast speeds, and it's trajectory is capable of being controlled by the users intentions. This allows the user the ability to make the Drill home in on a desired position, making this technique almost impossible to avoid. The drill's unique characteristic is that rather than breaking down earth by radiating lightning bolts throughout the rock so as to cause it to crumble, it simply plows through opposing earth with sheer brute force. Completely eradicating the earth in its path with its immense piercing, or rather drilling, capabilities so as to leave a linear, clean hole within the rock. Instead of causing it to crumble into debris as it commonly characteristic of lightning and earth clashes. Thus the user is capable of directing this technique to the ground, where the lightning will drill a tunnel through the earth and approach the opponent from underground so as to erupt from beneath, to serve as a surprise attack. The user by performing a single handseal can release their fuuton chakra into the wind currents generated by the lightning, empowering them with chakra and creating a powerful wind/lightning combo with near unrivaled piercing capabilities, upon doing so the rotation speed of the lightning dramatically increases. Although the technique itself relies heavily on piercing capabilities, the user is capable of make dozens of long tentacle like lightning bolts radiate outwards from the main body. The tentacles, much like the main body are made of focused lightning, however unlike its predecessor they slice through opposing forces rather than piercing through. The tentacles rotate around the main body like a high-speed fan, their length generally being half the length of the main body. This commonly results in the earth around the hole created by the main body being sliced to pieces before crumbling. The size of the technique itself depends on the users intended purposes when spewing the technique, its size can generally range between a snooker cue, or be as large or even larger than techniques such as "Water Dragon Bullet Technique".

    Note:
    - Can only be used 2x
    - No Lightning or Wind techniques S rank or above for the rest of the turn and the next turn.
    - Can only be taught by Scaze

    X-Declined-X It seemed fine to an extend. But you went overboard mid way by adding the Wind release part. Hot air current were fine as well, but they should further act as restrictin the techniques directions. You are controlling lightning bolts and furious spinning lightning bolts to be exact, you never see a case of controlling them. So its OPED

    Raiton: Gekido Kujo Ika | Lighting release: Rage of the Cataclysmic Squid
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user spews a stream of condensed lightning that immediately begins to spin at amazingly high speeds. The stream of lightning somewhat resembles the upper body of a squid. The lightning itself is immensely compressed and linear, thus rather than having bolts radiating outwards it takes a spear like form. As aforementioned the lightning spins much like a drill at staggeringly fast speeds, at speeds so fast that it begins to generate hot wind currents around itself. The drill races forth in the released direction at fairly fast speeds, and it's trajectoryis set upon creation, allowing it to travel in patterns, albeit the path of travel is very linear and always rather easy to read and predict, for instance wide curving arcs, or simple back and forth zig zag motions. This allows the user the ability to make the Drill circumvent obstructions, or simply approach from a less obvious angle. The drill's unique characteristic is that rather than breaking down earth by radiating lightning bolts throughout the rock so as to cause it to crumble, it simply plows through opposing earth with sheer brute force. Completely eradicating the earth in its path with its immense piercing, or rather drilling, capabilities so as to leave a linear, clean hole within the rock, instead of causing it to crumble into debris as it commonly characteristic of lightning and earth clashes. Thus the user is capable of directing this technique to the ground, where the lightning will drill a tunnel through the earth and approach the opponent from underground so as to erupt from beneath, to serve as a surprise attack. Although the technique itself relies heavily on piercing capabilities, the user is capable of make dozens of long tentacle like lightning bolts radiate outwards from the main body. The tentacles, much like the main body are made of focused lightning, however unlike its predecessor they slice through opposing forces rather than piercing through. The tentacles rotate around the main body like a high-speed fan, their length generally being half the length of the main body. This commonly results in the earth around the hole created by the main body being sliced to pieces before crumbling. The size of the technique itself depends on the users intended purposes when spewing the technique, its size can generally range between a snooker cue, or be as large or even larger than techniques such as "Water Dragon Bullet Technique".

    Note:
    - Can only be used 2x
    - Thanks to the currents of spinning hot air generated by the lightning, this technique has a + 10 damage advantage over other opposing lightning techniques, and a + 10 resistance to wind release.

    - No Lightning techniques S rank or above for the rest of the turn and the next turn.
    - Can only be taught by Scaze
    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Completely remove the hot wind part, and the boost it makes the technique have, and traveling to the opponent from underground, i'm only going to allow the technique to travel directly towards the opponent, no further manipulation, specify the size next time, i won't allow ranging sizes, don't say "larger" than the water dragon technique, that's too vague.


    Suiton: | Water Release: Downburst
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: A rather simple technique where the user focuses their suiton chakra above the opponent, materializing a large amount of water. Then, through use of shape manipulation, the user quickly sculpts the water into a large rapidly spinning drill that, through the aid of gravity, descends downwards onto the opponent. Smashing and drilling the opponent into the ground with a large amount of crushing force. The drill can be made to be either wider and shorter, so as to cover a larger space, yet consequently have it's force spread out over a larger area, or thinner and longer, so as to target a smaller area with a large amount of piercing and crushing force. The amount of water summoned is slightly greater than techniques such as Storm Upheavel. Due to the fast rotating water, the interior of the drill is a myriad of fast moving crushing and slicing water. A few moments after impacting with the ground, the water simply disperses outwards in all directions, forming a water source.

    Note:
    - Can only be used 3x
    - Must be summoned at least five meters above the opponent to have a lethal amount of crushing force on initial impact.
    - Can only be taught by Scaze
    ____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    make it summoned 10 meters above the opponent, remove the colored, and choose a distinctive size, like i said in the above technique i won't allow ranging sizes, and being larger than the storm upheaval technique is too much, mention that you slam your hand onto the ground to summon such a drill.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 12:18 PM.

  2. #2142
    Gèckö's Avatar
    Status
    Gèckö is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    May 2012
    Posts
    12,367
    Location
    Jersey ._.
    #Pray4NB
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by The 4th Raikage View Post
    Raiton Seiteki Batafurai (Static Butterflies)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: The user builds up lightning chakra within his palm and shapes it into a disk. He holds his palm above his head then as the chakra build up gradually increases, the user claps his hands together releasing a swarm of small butterflies (10-20 butterflies | Size: 5-7 cm) The butterflies then travel at the opponent hastily, and attach to his skin. And shock him multiple times. Due to multiple butterflies attacking him, the butterflies cause slight paralysis. Leaving the opponent stunned for a brief moment.
    Note: Can be used by swinging a staff or sword aswell
    Note: Can only be used every 2 turns.
    Note: Can only be taught by The 4th Raikage


    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Mention how do the butterflies approach the opponent, is it a straight line, or can each be manipulated separately, make it useable 4 times per battle and remove the "attaching to the opponent's skin" part, everything else seems fine.
    Raiton Seiteki Batafurai (Static Butterflies)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: The user builds up lightning chakra within his palm and shapes it into a disk. He holds his palm above his head then as the chakra build up gradually increases, the user claps his hands together releasing a swarm of small butterflies (10-20 butterflies | Size: 5-7 cm) The butterflies then travel at the opponent hastily in a cluster, and shock the opponent multiple times. Due to multiple butterflies attacking him, the butterflies cause slight paralysis. Leaving the opponent stunned for a brief moment.
    Note: Can be used by swinging a staff or sword aswell
    Note: Can only be used 4 times per battle
    Note: Can only be taught by The 4th Raikage


    ________________________
    ✘ Approved ✘
    made it a B-rank, keep in mind that when you split the technique "make countless butterflies" the power of the technique is decreased, or well "divided" between the butterflies.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 12:22 PM.

  3. #2143
    Howard's Avatar
    Status
    Howard is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Aug 2010
    Posts
    29,074
    Location
    Frostfire Ridge
    O_O
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Howard View Post
    (Ryū-Ken Bakuhatsu) Dragon Fist Explosion
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Dragon Fist Explosion is an incredibly powerful attack, this technique is capable of destroying foes much more powerful and much larger then the user himself. The user begins by charging a fair amount of chakra into his hands and forearms the chakra sharpens the user's fist to an extent. The user then attacks by holding his fists out straight at the opponent positioning both arms facing the enemy with his elbows slightly bent, then once his fists are aligned he extends them releasing the chakra as he punches with both hands in unison this is all done in one fluid motion without any stopping. The punches themselves are able to crack the sternum causing pain if it hits the chest. (This movement resembles a Double Push Palm with closed fists) The chakra goes through intense shape manipulation as it forms into a large dragon that can be sent out to Mid range doing a fair amount of damage to the opponent if it hits him. It appears to look similar to a Mythical Chinese Dragon long and slim and it can pierce through the enemy if it hits him right. The real damage comes in when this jutsu is used in short range. The user can use the force of the chakra along with the weight of his own body to to deal a fatal blow to the opponent. If the punches directly hit the opponent the dragon made of chakra blasts through the opponent destroying their body leaving a large wound to the effected area. As the users fist are slightly sharpened by the chakra they also pierce deep into the opponent's body (if used in short range.) Since the basic chakra goes through shape change it is comparable in strength to Elemental jutsu of the same rank. The basic chakra can be swapped out for elemental chakra of the base five creating varying effects to the opponent. The Chakra Nature must be intangible to an extent meaning Doton and Suiton based chakra cannot be used for this jutsu.

    Lightning: If the Basic Chakra is swapped out for Raiton Chakra the Dragon will look like a long bolt of lightning in the shape of a Dragon. If used Mid range the Dragon has enough force to reach out and hit the opponent shocking him slightly causing a bit of paralysis and a numbing feeling this only lasts one turn. If used in short range it'll cause severe shock to the opponent's body tensing up his muscles and tearing through the effected area much like a Raikiri. It'll shock internal organs possibly causing organ failure it will also cause slight paralysis as well as a numbing feeling to the core muscles. The numbing and paralysis lasts two turns and doesn't stop the opponent from moving it only slows them down a bit.

    Wind: If the Basic Chakra is swapped out for Fuuton Chakra the dragon will look like a vortex of compressed wind. If used Mid range the wind dragon will have enough force to knock the opponent away and fracture a few bones. If used in short range it'll cause deep lacerations cutting deep into the opponent's body enough to be almost fatal. The Wind will have enough force behind it to fracture bones and cut and slice at muscle tissue making movement harder on the opponent.

    Fire: If the Basic Chakra is swapped out for Katon Chakra the dragon will look like a large jet of flame. If used in Mid range it'll have enough heat and will be dense enough to cause severe burns to the exterior of the opponent. If used in short range it'll cause severe burns to the opponent's body internally and externally. The heat will be so intense that it'll be able to roast the opponent as it passes through their body (not killing them but it'd be quite painful.) It'll cause dehydration and leave the opponent feeling burned throughout their body inside and out.

    Notes:

    -The jutsu can be used while moving and the user doesn't have to stand still to perform.
    -Can only be used twice per battle and must wait 3 turns before using again
    -If Basic Chakra is used no Basic Ninjutsu or Basic Genjutsu (this includes Nb gen and advanced Basic Ninjutsu) can be used the turn this jutsu is used and no Basic Ninjutsu of A rank or above the next turn.
    -The user can not use the chakra nature used, again that turn and no A ranks or above of that nature the next turn. (So if Lightning is used in exchange for the Basic Chakra the user can't use any other lightning jutsu that turn and no Lightning jutsu A rank or above the next turn.)


    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    *Oped
    (Ryū-Ken Bakuhatsu) Dragon Fist Explosion
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Dragon Fist Explosion is an incredibly powerful attack, this technique is capable of destroying foes much more powerful and much larger then the user himself. The user begins by charging a fair amount of chakra into his hands and forearms the chakra sharpens the user's fist to an extent. The user then attacks by holding his fists out straight at the opponent positioning both arms facing the enemy with his elbows slightly bent, then once his fists are aligned he extends them releasing the chakra as he punches with both hands in unison this is all done in one fluid motion without any stopping. The punches themselves are able to crack the sternum causing pain if it hits the chest. (This movement resembles a Double Push Palm with closed fists) The chakra goes through intense shape manipulation as it forms into a large dragon that can be sent out to Mid range doing a fair amount of damage to the opponent if it hits him. It appears to look similar to a Mythical Chinese Dragon long and slim and it can pierce through the enemy if it hits him right. The real damage comes in when this jutsu is used in short range. The user can use the force of the chakra along with the weight of his own body to to deal a fatal blow to the opponent. If the punches directly hit the opponent the dragon made of chakra blasts through the opponent destroying their body leaving a large wound to the effected area. As the users fist are slightly sharpened by the chakra they also pierce deep into the opponent's body (if used in short range.) Since the basic chakra goes through shape change it is comparable in strength to Elemental jutsu of the same rank.

    Notes:

    -The jutsu can be used while moving and the user doesn't have to stand still to perform.
    -Can only be used twice per battle and must wait 3 turns before using again
    -No Basic Ninjutsu or Basic Genjutsu (this includes Nb gen and advanced Basic Ninjutsu [Non Elemental]) can be used the turn this jutsu is used and no Basic Ninjutsu of A rank or above the next turn.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    This would need EIG (as its similar to hirudora) or Jyuuken (as its similar to existing techniques ) or to be elemental in nature (which would collide with existing techniques). Still has tons of "grey" areas in the description though.
    New:

    (Fuuton: Heki Handou) Wind Release: Burst Kicks
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: Burst kicks are very powerful kicks, where fuuton chakra is circulated through the legs but held within them to create a burst of air pressure when the user kicks. The burst of wind is created through a very quick kicking motion as the user releases the fuuton chakra. These bursts are able to send an opponent flying back through the air. These bursts can also be used to literally walk on air, by rapidly kicking and releasing trace amounts of fuuton chakra the air pressure lets the user move through the air almost like walking on solid ground. The user can climb up into the air using this tech and continue staying in the air through steadily kicking downwards while releasing smaller amounts of fuuton chakra at a single point in the foot. If the user kicks someone he can only kick once as he's releasing all of the chakra at once but if he climbs into the air using the kicks he can kick multiple times because he's only releasing small amounts of fuuton chakra to create small bursts just enough to hold him up in the air.
    Notes:
    -Can only be used thrice
    -No jutsu that require chakra manipulation can be used while this jutsu is in play
    -Can only use one other jutsu the turn this jutsu is used
    -Can only stay air borne for two turns
    -The user's legs will feel drained (the same feeling you get after a long run where your legs feel weak and are hard to move) after this jutsu so they can't use kicking jutsu the turn after this jutsu ends.
    _______________________________
    ✘ Leaving for Scorpseh ✘


    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Don't resubmit. Done before and this would require a CFS. But since ti was done before...
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 01-10-2013 at 12:29 PM.

  4. #2144
    Vasto Lordé's Avatar
    Status
    Vasto Lordé is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Aug 2011
    Posts
    8,297
    Location
    Inexistent.
    Oh my oh my.... such a
    tragedy.
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    ( Ninpō: Ikari no ame ) - Ninja Arts: Rains of Fury
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user first throws an Oil jar into the air either short range or mid range from him, then takes out a Kunai or an item with an explosive tag attached to it and aim it towards the bottom of the Jar in an angle which makes the Jar explode in a way that sends Oil drops that are on fire, and the same size as a rain drop, down towards the opponent burning him. These Oil drops are capable of setting anything it touches on fire, and can cause second degree burns.

    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: Can only be taught by Ł Lawliet.
    ________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    And how exactly do you plan on getting this oil jar?


    ( Furea ) - Flare
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: C - Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: The user first Stands and extends his right leg in front of him and his left leg to the left of him. Then he places his hands on the floor with his right hand on the floor in between his legs. Then the user lifts his left hand in the air to help with both balance and momentum, after that he puts his weight on his left leg and swings his right leg up and around. The user rotates his legs around his body, shifting his weight from one hand to the other and back again as his legs pass. This process can be done much quicker if the user was of Sannin rank and higher.

    Note: Can only be taught by Ł Lawliet.
    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    What is this O_o why does it have damage points and mentioned as an attack when i don't see any kind of attack in the description, or chakra charging as well.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 12:29 PM.

  5. #2145
    Kwalker394's Avatar
    Status
    Kwalker394 is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Mar 2012
    Posts
    3,697
    Location
    In my room >_>
    Is back and happy to be back
    ^_^
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Kwalker394 View Post
    Kuro Nodo Komadori: Senpai Seijin (Black-Throated Robin: Elder Sage)
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long Range
    Chakra: 40 Chakra
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    The user wipes his/her blood on the hand that he/she has the summoning tattoo on. He/she will then perform the Boar-Dog-Bird-Monkey-Ram and summon The Elder Sage The ruler of all Black-Throated Robin's. The Elder Sage is a true 100% Black-Throated Robin and is a giant standing at 45 meters tall. He is also very old. He has a Red face, throat and upper breast with a brown, red, and blue crown and nape, and a Black Zigzagged mark on the neck. The upper parts are grey, and the underparts black to dark grey over the abdomen and under the tail coverts. The bill and legs are black, and the eyes are dark red. The plumage is reminiscent of a cuckoo-shrike but the black neck marking is diagnostic.
    The Elder Sage is a L. obscura Species in the Genus Luscinia.

    Abilities:
    ~Elder Sage can use Katon up to S Rank
    ~Able to talk
    ~Because of his wing strength he can deflect any weapons thrown at him as well as any C rank attacks by flapping his powerful wings by creating a strong gust of wind.
    ~The summoner can ride on his back while flying
    ~When dispersing instead of the average white smoke, Elder Sage, when dispersed, erupts in a fire storm

    Restrictions:
    ~Must have signed the Black-Throated Robin contract
    ~Can only be summoned 1 time per battle
    ~Only the current onwer of the Black-Throated Robin contract can summon the Elder Sage but have to learn the technique from the previous owner (Unless the current owenr is the creator)
    ~No other Black-Throated Robin can be summoned at the same time as Elder Sage
    ~The Elder Sage can stay on the battle field for 6 turns
    ~Because of his age, as each turn passes while Elder Sage is summoned his power weakens (1st turn S rank, 2nd turn A rank, 3rd B rank, 4th C rank, 5th D rank, 6th D rank+dispersed as soon as the user's last jutsu is preformed


    Summoning approval ~HERE~

    Katana Reikon (Blade of Souls)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid Range
    Chakra: 40 Chakra
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    Said to be forged by the Reaper himself, this scyord had been lost in time and to everyone. It was hidden in ancient ruins of old. During his travel through the Lighting Country, Kwalker394 stumbled onto some old ruins and found this sword sealed away. after trying to release the sword nothing worked then suddenly the ruins rumbled with heavy and deep words saying, "He who is worthy may only wield this scyord, for it only chooses one master." Hearing these words Kwalker394 stared at the crystal in the middle of the rings of the handle. Watching it glow dark red he tries to grab it. Slowly he griped the scyord and repeated to himself that "I am worthy." and pulled the scyord. After a good pull the seal wrapped around the scyord gave and the sword was free. In disbelief Kwalker394 closely examined the scyord and a whisper in his ear told him to channel chakra into the sword. As he did the blade of the sword pivoted and took a shape into a scythe. Taking the scyord with him on his travels Kwalker394 discovered another ability in the scyord as well. Later on finding out that the scyord was crafted from a very special dark metal called Reikon~Metaru (Soul Metal) which is indestructible metal that is soaked with chakra when forged and crafted which gave it special a ability.

    Ability's:
    Blade of Souls being able to have one master only responds to Kwalker394. The blade can extend or retract by using the users raw chakra making it a deadly sword to be in battle with. When the blade retracts the metal is compressed turning the scyord into a sword, and when the blade extends the scythe tip of the blade pivots out from the tip of the sword turning into a type of scythe. The weight and balance is different as well depending on the extending or retracting state. The sword can also be attracted to the user meaning that if the user looses the sword or the sword is knocked out of the users hand he can simply command the sword to return as long as the sword is in short distance away. Using the red crystal at the handle as a medium the user can cast a Genjutsu known as "The Graveyard" (A Rank). This Genjutsu makes the opponent believe that they are standing in a graveyard under a full moon. While the target is under this Genjutsu dead corpse's begin to rise out of the tombs and coffins and slowly limp towards the target. Surrounding him from all angles they trap the target and a shadow figure with a dark hood appears and chops off his limbs with the scyord. Releasing this genjutsu on to the opponent requires a cut, opponent looking at the sword, or some way come in contact with the opponent. Also Kwalker394 can swing the scyord and release the chakra in it at the target making a chakra slash. Once the target is hit with this chakra wave slash it will also put him in the genjutsu. If the opponent touches this scyord by the means of picking it up and using it for any reason the genjutsu is released automatically by the stored up chakra already in the sword from its master while also sucking a tiny bit of the opponents chakra.
    ~Only Kwalker394 can use this sword
    ~Must be a Master of Genjutsu in order to use this sword
    ~The Genjutsu "The Graveyard" can only be used 3 times per battle
    ~Self activating of the Genjutsu by opponents touch can only happen 1 time
    ~Either activation of the Genjutsu counts as a move towards the users 3 move limit/jutsu
    ~Can come back to the users hands if in short range and the user is able to use his hand
    ~Retracting/extending the blade can be used freely (But only 1 retract or extend per turn)
    ~Slashing the chakra from the scyord goes up to long range but gives makes the Genjutsu weak so it will be a B rank from mid range and C Rank from long range

    Scyord looks:
    Scyord= Sword+Scythe


    Will be dropping THIS if approved

    Katon: To-chi Awai (Fire Style: Welders Light)
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long Range
    Chakra: 20 Chakra
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    The user will send out his Katon chakra and create a ball of fire. The user will then heat it up intensively by using his mastery of Katon to where the flames turn white. While the flames turn white the light given off by this jutsu is as bright as a welders torch blinding anyone that looks at it. The flame is up and above the users head so it will not effect the user but anyone in front or all around that can see this jutsu will be short termed blinded if looked upon. If forced to look, or if the target stares directly in the light, the target my go blind for the rest of the battle due to the intense light.
    ~Can only be taught by Kwalker394
    ~Must have mastered Katon to use
    ~Can only be used 3 times per battle

    ______________
    ±± All Declined ±±
    When you quote something, don't edit the quotes.-..That can be constructed as trying to trick us. When you quote something, the colors and formatting of the quoted post are kept. Xylon's checks are grey... Don't ever try this again you 'll end up banned from the cj thread.
    Kuro Nodo Komadori: Senpai Seijin (Black-Throated Robin: Elder Sage)
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long Range
    Chakra: 40 Chakra
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    The user wipes his/her blood on the hand that he/she has the summoning tattoo on. He/she will then perform the Boar-Dog-Bird-Monkey-Ram and summon The Elder Sage The ruler of all Black-Throated Robin's. The Elder Sage is a true 100% Black-Throated Robin and is a giant standing at 45 meters tall. He is also very old. He has a Red face, throat and upper breast with a brown, red, and blue crown and nape, and a Black Zigzagged mark on the neck. The upper parts are grey, and the underparts black to dark grey over the abdomen and under the tail coverts. The bill and legs are black, and the eyes are dark red. The plumage is reminiscent of a cuckoo-shrike but the black neck marking is diagnostic.
    The Elder Sage is a L. obscura Species in the Genus Luscinia.

    Abilities:
    ~Elder Sage can use Katon up to S Rank
    ~Able to talk
    ~Because of his wing strength he can deflect any weapons thrown at him as well as any C rank attacks by flapping his powerful wings by creating a strong gust of wind.
    ~The summoner can ride on his back while flying
    ~When dispersing instead of the average white smoke, Elder Sage, when dispersed, erupts in a fire storm

    Restrictions:
    ~Must have signed the Black-Throated Robin contract
    ~Can only be summoned 1 time per battle
    ~Only the current onwer of the Black-Throated Robin contract can summon the Elder Sage but have to learn the technique from the previous owner (Unless the current owenr is the creator)
    ~No other Black-Throated Robin can be summoned at the same time as Elder Sage
    ~The Elder Sage can stay on the battle field for 6 turns
    ~Because of his age, as each turn passes while Elder Sage is summoned his power weakens (1st turn S rank, 2nd turn A rank, 3rd B rank, 4th C rank, 5th D rank, 6th D rank+dispersed as soon as the user's last jutsu is preformed
    __________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Make the summon last 4 turns on the field max, mention if he's able to use Fire techniques up to S-rank including the ones that require handseals or not, remove that whole fire storm eruption when dispersing, it will be misused and won't allow that, you could just add erupting in black smoke for effects lol, make the flapping wings to deflect attacks count as a move and limit the number of times it can be used, remove that last restriction, it's meaningless and doesn't make any sense, what does the "Short-Long range" refer to exactly?


    Summoning approval ~HERE~

    Katana Reikon (Blade of Souls)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid Range
    Chakra: 40 Chakra
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    Said to be forged by the Reaper himself, this scyord had been lost in time and to everyone. It was hidden in ancient ruins of old. During his travel through the Lighting Country, Kwalker394 stumbled onto some old ruins and found this sword sealed away. after trying to release the sword nothing worked then suddenly the ruins rumbled with heavy and deep words saying, "He who is worthy may only wield this scyord, for it only chooses one master." Hearing these words Kwalker394 stared at the crystal in the middle of the rings of the handle. Watching it glow dark red he tries to grab it. Slowly he griped the scyord and repeated to himself that "I am worthy." and pulled the scyord. After a good pull the seal wrapped around the scyord gave and the sword was free. In disbelief Kwalker394 closely examined the scyord and a whisper in his ear told him to channel chakra into the sword. As he did the blade of the sword pivoted and took a shape into a scythe. Taking the scyord with him on his travels Kwalker394 discovered another ability in the scyord as well. Later on finding out that the scyord was crafted from a very special dark metal called Reikon~Metaru (Soul Metal) which is indestructible metal that is soaked with chakra when forged and crafted which gave it special a ability.

    Ability's:
    Blade of Souls being able to have one master only responds to Kwalker394. The blade can extend or retract by using the users raw chakra making it a deadly sword to be in battle with. When the blade retracts the metal is compressed turning the scyord into a sword, and when the blade extends the scythe tip of the blade pivots out from the tip of the sword turning into a type of scythe. The weight and balance is different as well depending on the extending or retracting state. The sword can also be attracted to the user meaning that if the user looses the sword or the sword is knocked out of the users hand he can simply command the sword to return as long as the sword is in short distance away. Using the red crystal at the handle as a medium the user can cast a Genjutsu known as "The Graveyard" (A Rank). This Genjutsu makes the opponent believe that they are standing in a graveyard under a full moon. While the target is under this Genjutsu dead corpse's begin to rise out of the tombs and coffins and slowly limp towards the target. Surrounding him from all angles they trap the target and a shadow figure with a dark hood appears and chops off his limbs with the scyord. Releasing this genjutsu on to the opponent requires a cut, opponent looking at the sword, or some way come in contact with the opponent. Also Kwalker394 can swing the scyord and release the chakra in it at the target making a chakra slash. Once the target is hit with this chakra wave slash it will also put him in the genjutsu. If the opponent touches this scyord by the means of picking it up and using it for any reason the genjutsu is released automatically by the stored up chakra already in the sword from its master while also sucking a tiny bit of the opponents chakra.
    ~Only Kwalker394 can use this sword
    ~Must be a Master of Genjutsu in order to use this sword
    ~The Genjutsu "The Graveyard" can only be used 3 times per battle
    ~Self activating of the Genjutsu by opponents touch can only happen 1 time
    ~Either activation of the Genjutsu counts as a move towards the users 3 move limit/jutsu
    ~Can come back to the users hands if in short range and the user is able to use his hand
    ~Retracting/extending the blade can be used freely (But only 1 retract or extend per turn)
    ~Slashing the chakra from the scyord goes up to long range but gives makes the Genjutsu weak so it will be a B rank from mid range and C Rank from long range

    Scyord looks:
    Scyord= Sword+Scythe

    ____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    There are too many things wrong with it, if i mentioned them all it'll take forever, mainly the retracting and extending thing, the balance and weight, chakra wave, i'm fine with the genjutsu as long as it counts as one of the moves per turn, that whole having "some kind of contact with the enemy" is vague, a cut or them looking at the crystal is fine, activating the genjutsu by a chakra wave? lolwut? that whole chakra wave triggering the genjutsu is a no


    Will be dropping THIS if approved

    Katon: To-chi Awai (Fire Style: Welders Light)
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long Range
    Chakra: 20 Chakra
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    The user will send out his Katon chakra and create a ball of fire. The user will then heat it up intensively by using his mastery of Katon to where the flames turn white. While the flames turn white the light given off by this jutsu is as bright as a welders torch blinding anyone that looks at it. The flame is up and above the users head so it will not effect the user but anyone in front or all around that can see this jutsu will be short termed blinded if looked upon. If forced to look, or if the target stares directly in the light, the target my go blind for the rest of the battle due to the intense light.
    ~Can only be taught by Kwalker394
    ~Must have mastered Katon to use
    ~Can only be used 3 times per battle
    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Go blind for the rest of the battle @_@? it's similar to lightning techniques that release a blinding light and too many of them are made already, don't resubmit.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 12:54 PM.

  6. #2146
    ReXii's Avatar
    Status
    ReXii is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Jun 2011
    Posts
    14,090
    Location
    Up.
    The one in front of the gun
    lives forever.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Mangekyou Haritsuke)- Kaleidoscopic Crucifixion
    Rank: A
    Type: Offense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60 (Mental pain)
    Description:
    The kaleidoscopic crucifixion is a genjutsu technique unique to the Uchiha, cast by simply making eye contact with the opponent, it begins by causing them to believe there eyes have lost focus spinning like a kaleidoscope they see eight versions of the user, the converge rapidly in to one, upon converging the genjutsu is activated in full, locking the opponent in a modified version of the demonic shackling stakes, that instead takes the form of a large cross with spikes holding them on it, this technique paralyzes them in a similar way to the shackling stakes and causes severe mental trauma.
    *Only usable twice per battle*
    *Usable only by a 3T Sharingan holder*
    *Paralysis lasts one turn*
    *May only be taught by ReXii*
    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Sharingan genjutsu customs are banned.


    (Katon: Nenshou Akuma Fuusha)- Fire release: Flaming Demon Windmill
    Rank: B
    Type: Offense
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description:
    A specialist fire technique, the user begins by holding two demon windmill shuriken, one in each hand. After quickly releasing them one after another by peforming a whirlwind move, the user secretly holds on to some wire attached to each of the shuriken, as they reach closer to the opponent the user blow's a heavy stream of fire down the length of the wire, igniting the shuriken, thanks to the spinning motion and concealed paper tags in the center of the shuriken they explode in a flaming whirlwind of fire, controlled by the user they can surround the opponent before being made to converge on him, making avoiding the move quite difficult.
    *Only usable twice per battle*
    *May only be taught by ReXii*
    __________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Wouldn't the explosive tags destroy the windmill shurikens when they explode? what Itachi does is a simple fireballs "streams" that surround the shuriken, but a fire explosion like that will destroy them, and what do you mean by the flaming whirlwinds being controlled to surround the opponent before converging on them?


    (Jigoku Getsuei )- Hell's Moon
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:
    A fearsome weapon, this Chokuto is said to have been designed in the pits of hell itself, the weapon is a legendary duality weapon, containing both the elements of fire and water in the blade, indestructible and very light, when used by a swordsman it appears as a natural and not to astonishing weapon, but if the user knows the phrase of activation for the sword, which is "In moonlight they are judged" the weapons dual natures activate, the blade of the weapon vanishes leaving the user holding only a hilt, at that moment the area around the user is surrounded by dozens of tiny droplets of stationary water, while the area in a 3 meter radius around the opponent does the same with small orbs of fire, the fire orbs begin to whirl at huge speeds around the opponent trapping him inside of the zone, the orbs of fire then slam in to the opponent engulfing him in flames.
    The duality ability of the sword is to peform the same technique as above, but using the term, "Drag them to hell" this causes the fire orbs to surround the user, whilst tiny droplets of stationary water surround the opponent, before spinning rapidly forming a whirlpool effect in mid air, that draws the opponent in causing him to drown if left uncountered.

    *The special fire ability is usable only once per battle and hold the power of an S rank fire technique, the water droplets are equivelant of an A ranked defense*
    *The special water ability is isable only once per battle and holds the power of an S rank water technique, the fire orbs are the equivelant of an A ranked defense*
    *May only be taught by ReXii*


    ^Colour of the blade changes from red to blue grip depending on ability used.
    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Only one elemental nature i'm going to allow with CWs, not dual or KGs, so rework it accordingly, also Fire doesn't materialize, it's not like water so it can't be made like that, work the techniques according to this, also i'm not going to allow 360 degrees defense anymore.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 01:22 PM.

  7. #2147
    Light.'s Avatar
    Status
    Light. is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Sep 2011
    Posts
    13,721
    Location
    The Tennis Court
    Just a lonely drifter...
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    X-Tebukuro| X-Gloves
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40 [when active]
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The X gloves were said to be passed down to a ninja that showed extreme power and use of the Katon element. These gloves are said to be mostly red, Vongola Emblem in the middle, has an orange cross on top of it reading "Vongola Famiglia," and Flame type designs also covers the base of the gloves. These gloves are metallic, allowing the user to have a firm grip on whatever her/she touches. These gloves are surprisingly light weight. These gloves are said to been made in the stomach of a dragon. These gloves have a abilities. To activate the ability, the user have to use special trigger word. When the user enters a dangerous situation, they will say 'X-Gloves Activate' causing a large chakra surge to flow to the gloves, encasing them in katon chakra. The user will then be ale to use the gloves as a fire technique. This only does damage if it makes contact with the opponent. This ability will count as a B-rank fire technique and ca be used every other turn. This takes up one of the users jutsu slots for that turn.

    -Must have Mastered katon
    -When glove ability is activated, user can only use B-rank and lower water techniques
    -Mus be Kage ranked or higher to use
    -Can only be used by Light...

    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    The X Gloves are made by Axle already, so get his permission first and we'll discuss the abilities of the sword.


    (Katon: x-ba-na-)| Fire Release: X-Burner
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Mid-Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: For this technique, the user will extend his/her hands forward, focusing a large amount of Katon chakra. The user will then condense/charging this chakra into both of their palms. The user will have to wait about 7 seconds to make sure that their chakra is evenly charged in both arm or this won't work. Because of the strength of this technique, the user has to put one hand behind them, and then the other hand to release the blast. The user will turn to their side, achieving perfect symmetry then they will yell "X-Burner" releasing the large mass of flame from both arms. The arm that is facing away from the opponent is not to attack, but for support or-else the user would be sent flying because of the extreme pressure from the arm they fired the technique. The x-burner is a large beam of pure fire chakra that is sent toward the opponent in one direction which means it can be eaisly avoided, but does extensive damage if it makes a direct hit

    Drawbacks and notes:

    -When the user uses this technique, the user can't use ANY katon techniques for the Next 2 turns
    -User becomes very tired because of the extensive amount of chakra used and can hardly move
    -The user must stay stationary when using
    -Must be used as a last resort
    -Can only be fired twice
    -Must have mastered the basic 5
    -Can only be used by Light...


    ________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Add a speed decrease restriction, and no S-ranks can be used in the next turn that this technique is used in, define how big is the stream of fire, and by stream it means that you have to keep releasing the fire chakra through your palms it's not a blast, remove that whole "must be used as a last resort" thing, and you need to find a way to make the waiting period other than "7 seconds" as the RP is not measured by seconds, it's measured by turns and timeframes.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 01:42 PM.

  8. #2148
    Senior Member Rojuro's Avatar
    Status
    Rojuro is offline
    Join Date
    Sep 2012
    Posts
    11,743
    Location
    Soul academy
    R.I.P Big Z you'll be missed!
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Custom summoning

    Summoning Animal: Digging dachshund
    Scroll Owner: Roju
    Other Users who have signed contract: None yet
    Summoning Boss if existing: None yet
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None as of yet
    Description and Background:
    Digging dachshunds are the greatest burrower known to small dogs. Can be seen tunnelling into enemy holes and earth fortresses.
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dachshund#Characteristics
    the smelling ability's of a dachshund are beyond that of more than the greatest of hunting dogs which is why they have the long ears capable of holding scent also the long snout for a small dog.*
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dachshund#Classification
    A dachshund normally has sharp nails that are built for digging but can also be used to hold the enemy on the ground because they are known to be able to hold things within there front paw's very well. These pups differ from ninja hounds as that they are not a ninja hound but a digging hound and a scent tracking hound. also they cannot use ninjutsu but they can use chakra to enhance digging and scent tracking skills also using chakra to increase there speed at which they can travel. Color's of the said dachshunds varies also does hair length for the different seasons and climate. Refer to this link for looks and coats of the dachshunds.
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dachshund#Coat_and_color


    Dachshunds are unique in the fact that they will try eating anything once. But normally sticks to there puppie protein food though which is kept in the ninja's pup prep pouch. For added intensity conditions the dachshund will tear apart light barrier's with a steak strip treat.
    Signer's of the contract will receive the dachshund mark of summoning ability.

    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    It's a dog subspecies, and the dogs contract, "ninken" are cannon, not to mention there's also a custom dog contract and a wolf one, so no subspecies of cannon contracts will be approved.


    Custom weapon

    (金沙羅, Golden Sal Tree)-Kinshara*
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid range
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Well the whip in it's self has a unique golden look while the scabbard has a 2.5 inch length. The whip can extends from the scabbard to the length of 25 feet while being manipulated by chakra to control the direction of attack and the speed in which the whip is being sent out at. meaning this is a chakra activated weapon as the whip will only extend when my chakra has been discharged into the scabbard.The whip has a flower like end at the end of it and has a unique ability where the user's sends chakra into to blind an opponent with bright flashes and light source beaming off the flower like tip. Knowing that this is a length based weapon puppet master's would have an advantage against this weapon they can easily attach chakra string to this whip to stop its movements. the whip is made of flexible titanium joints capable of flexing and moving at high speeds.This whip works very well for subdue tactics and disabling an enemy from being able to move or make hand sign by wrapping around there body as long as the enemy is wrapped up with the whip making hand signs is nearly impossible unless you can do handsigns with one hand.
    Look of the
    Secret technique: the user of Kinshara can change the frequency of his chakra to make a musical genjutsu that resides out of the small pin holes in the gold links of Kinshara the genjutsu is played in a crescendo type melody (meaning calming) hypnotizing the enemy leaving them motionless. Now to explain what changing the frequency will mean. By utilizing the different vibrations between raiton chakra in my hand the user can speed up the vibrations until they make a screeching type noise. Now by feeding that chakra in through the scabbard it is released out the the numerous pin holes which are setup in perfect coordination to release a melody by continuation of feeding the chakra frequencys to Kinshara.
    weapon:

    Restrictions:
    - light flash usage attacks with Kinshara have a limit of 3 attacks per battle and needs a one turn cool down to use.
    -genjutsu effect can only be used twice in battle. And has a three turn period in between uses.
    -Can only be used Roju
    - can be used 5 strikes per turn as the effects of Kinshara are very melodramatic.
    - The whip will only extend with roju's touch only as his my chakra has been mixed in with the fabrication of the whip

    Special notes: as this is a tactic type weapon does not do direct damage to opponents rather it has effect which were all list but will list again
    - binding
    -bright flower light
    -genjutsu
    -extension (can trip and or knock over opponent as fact that Kinshara is not sharp so can only leave bruising an or internal injuries from binding or being hit.)
    ________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Music genjutsu is a no, you need to have sound release and Roku NR's permission to have that, and you should in the future define the extension of a range it can reach up to, like Mid range, Long range etc, remove the flexible titanium joins, -Mugen- has Titanium release and thus your CW can't have that, and hypnotizing ability? that's a Sharingan's ability, what bright flower light? changing the chakra frequency? honestly the CW is a big mess.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 01:54 PM.

  9. #2149
    Daemon's Avatar
    Status
    Daemon is online now
    Join Date
    Jul 2009
    Posts
    15,988
    Location
    A place
    Above the law.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Areno Kou) - Longsword of the Prince
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The longsword of the prince was forged with special metals causing it to have great durability. This sword was handed down through generations of princes. To the owner of this blade, it is nearly weightless allowing them to swing and use them sword with ease while maintaining great speed with their strikes. For a stranger, trying to pick up the the blade
    is nearly impossible because the metals in the sword resonates with the owners chakra freeing up almost all weight from the sword. Since the metal of the blade does not resonate with the opponents chakra non of that weight is lifted causing the sword to almost way 600 pounds. This blade carries special abilities only useable by the owner. The metal takes the users chakra when it is focused in the blade causing the sword to rapidly vibrate increasing the swords cutting power able to cute through flesh and bone like butter. Once per move, while the sword is vibrating the user can over load the sword with chakra causing an outward chakra discharged from the sword capabale of knocking the opponent backward(A-rank Strength). The discharge can disperse energy based ninjutsu A-rank and lower. Energy based ninjutsu includes: Fire, Wind, Lightning and raw chakra discharged based jutsu. The chakra from the blade can reach up to mid range.
    Look of the sword:

    Restrictions:
    -Can only be used Daemon
    - Chakra discharge overload can only used 3 times per battle and has to weight 1 turn in between usages
    - The swords weight only changes when the user is in contact with the sword, if not the weight becomes the regular
    600 pounds.
    ____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    600 pounds? ok disregarding that, no chakra infusable swords are allowed in CWs anymore.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 01:58 PM.

  10. #2150
    Southernplayalistic's Avatar
    Status
    Southernplayalistic is online now
    Gender
    Join Date
    May 2011
    Posts
    9,603
    Location
    Dallas, TX
    Gyojin Killer [0/13]
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Orochimaru~ View Post
    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shizaku) -Summoning Technique-Shizaku
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Offense
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shizaku. Shizaku is a massive black spitting cobra roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shizaku is a Fire Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Fire jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a fire style snake Shizaku can shoot fireballs from his mouth and being a spitting cobra he is able to spit burning venom that burn through the enemies skin and paralyze on contact. He is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on his head.
    -Stays on field for 5 turns
    -Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
    -All jutse come out of his mouth
    ♠ Declined ♠
    I have some issues with this jutsu. Firstly, it is quite the generic jutsu, and isn't unique, but alright, I can let that slip. Secondly, it can only stay on the field for four turns.
    Lastly, you said that it can spit burning venom from its mouth? You need to be more specific here or make a completely another jutsu for this. How much venom can it spit, what are the restrictions to it, and the general range as well.

    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shin) -Summoning Technique-Shin
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Offense
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shin. Shin is a massive black and green pitviper roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shin is a Lightning Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Lightning jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a lightning style snake Shin can move at very high speeds that only a 3t Sharingan and a Byakugan can track being a spitting pitviper he can spit out venom that can numb an area uppon contact . He is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on his head.
    -Stays on field for 5 turns
    -Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
    -All jutse come out of his mouth
    ♠ Declined ♠
    Same reason as above with the venom, and no, it can not move so fast that only a 3T or Byakugan can track it. Change that.
    Four turns, please.


    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shizaka) -Summoning Technique-Shizaka
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Offense
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shizaka. Shizaks is a massive blue water python roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shizaka is a Water Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Water jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a water style snake Shizaka can swim underwater far deeper than any opponent can reach her and move at very high speeds underwater. She is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on her head also about 4-5 people can ride in her mouth for underwater adventures
    -Stays on field for 5 turns
    -Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
    -All jutse come out of her mouth
    ♠ Declined ♠
    Exactly how far deep in the water can she swim, and I need a limit on how fast she can swim as well.
    Again, lack of detail. Four turns as well.


    Snake signing

    Added restrictions(Didnt think A rank summons needed restrictions)
    CHANGES ARE BOLD


    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shizaku) -Summoning Technique-Shizaku
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Offense
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shizaku. Shizaku is a massive black spitting cobra roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shizaku is a Fire Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Fire jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a fire style snake Shizaku can shoot fireballs from his mouth and being a spitting cobra he is able to spit burning venom that burn through the enemies skin(Jutsu will be submitted later). He is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on his head.
    -Stays on field for 4 turns
    -Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
    -All jutsu come out of his mouth
    ________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Venom doesn't "burn" acid does, Snakes can release special venoms of toxins to make special effects like paralysis, it can give a burning sensation yes, but not actual burning, it's been shown in the anime with Kabuto against Yamato that snakes can release the special venoms but not all of the snakes can use it, also don't make the venom into a technique i won't allow that, make it an ability of the snake, i prefer if the venom is released when the opponent is bitten by the snake.


    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shin) -Summoning Technique-Shin
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Offense
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shin. Shin is a massive black and green pitviper roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shin is a Lightning Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Lightning jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a lightning style snake Shin can electrically charge his body at will and shock anything he comes in contact with being a spitting pitviper he can spit out venom that can numb an area upon contact(Jutsu will be submitted later). He is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on his head.
    -Stays on field for 4 turns
    -Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
    -All jutse come out of his mouth
    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    remove the electrically charging his body at will, same as above with the venom, make it as an ability of the snake not a separate jutsu


    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shizaka) -Summoning Technique-Shizaka
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Offense
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shizaka. Shizaka is a massive blue water python roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shizaka is a Water Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Water jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a water style snake Shizaka can swim underwater far deeper than any opponent can reach reaching depts of 100 meters underwater and move at very high speeds underwater moving as fast . She is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on her head also about 4-5 people can ride in her mouth for underwater adventures
    -Stays on field for 4 turns
    -Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
    -All jutse come out of her mouth
    ________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    swimming deeper than any opponent can reach? reaching depth of 100 meters? that's not specifying his swimming speed that's making him overpowered and both are vague terms.


    Snake signing

    Changed 5 turns to 4
    And edited the bold stuff took out the only 3t and Byakugan can track and stuff you said
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 02:16 PM.

  11. #2151
    Seblax's Avatar
    Status
    Seblax is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Aug 2009
    Posts
    8,333
    Location
    Amman, Jordan.
    I miss my V award..
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Link for the weapon's approval: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...05#post8989105

    Art of the Jade Warp: Elctrical Elemination - Tamamayu no Jutsu: Raikou Shoukyo

    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack\Supplementary\Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90
    Description: While using Jade Warp, the user put all of his power and concentration into sending the wires in the form of the third/last quarter of the moon's phrases, as he do that, he channel his lightning chakra through the wires making them become electrical. this technique covers the same size as Fire release: Great Fire Majestic Annihilation with a similar shape made of hundreds of electrical strings capable of wiping out all the targets that stands before the its user, however, once this jutsu is used most of the wires of the Jade Warp wires making it nothing more than a gauntlet with no special powers.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Must have the Jade Warp on and mastered lightning element.
    -Once used, the user can no longer use the Jade Warp techniques or ability or lightning element in the next two round.
    -This technique look somewhat like the upper part of this manga page:


    ________________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    I like the technique, but covering a radius similar to the Great Fire Majestic Annihilation is too much, reduce that, and forbidden ranked techniques require physical drawbacks, like decreased speed, movement puts a huge strain on your body, reduced handseals speed, etc those along with the ones that you have, remove the "wiping all the targets that stand before the user stuff".


    Art of the Jade Warp: Hyperlink - Tamamayu no Jutsu: Chourenketsushi
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary\Attack
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: A quick dodging technique where the user send a lightning chakra infused wires that makes contract with the ground or a reliable object at great speed thanks to the lightning chakra and make them sting into it. After that, the user pull himself toward it using his high body strength which result a fast escape from fast techniques that the user may face. This technique can also be used to attack the enemy and drag them to the user and causing his/her body to be paralyze by the lightning.
    -Can only be used through the Jade Warp.
    -Only usable twice per battle.
    -Require the user to know up to A rank lightning element to use it.
    -This technique looks somewhat like the last part of this manga page:

    And how it could be offensive in this:

    ______________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    All i'm seeing is "great speed", "fast escape", "great speed" those terms are vague and i won't allow that so remove them, i'm fine with you having the technique stick to something solid then retract yourself to it, that should happen by retracting the wires to the gauntlet not with your "high upper body strength", but remove the attacking part of the technique, how is this going to allow you a quick dodge when it's threads that extend from the gaunlet at another place and pulls you towards it, the technique itself is slow.


    Art of the Jade Warp: Fabric Sewer - Tamamayu no Jutsu: Tanmono Koukyo
    Rank: A
    Type: Differensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short – Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A(+10 to taijutsu if used to make long sleeves)
    Description: Using Tamamayu, The user manipulate the strings into sewing into each other taking the shape of either a shield of fabric that bends itself against the ground with as strong as the jutsu is was to take the shape of a ball around the user to maintain a perfect protection against that attack. Or the shape of monk's sleeves around the user's arms. The sleeves are baggy and long but maintain a hole in each of them where the user's hands pop out, those sleeves can be used in taijutsu and works perfect against thrown objects.
    -Can only be used thrice.
    -If used to make sleeves, they will only remain for two turns.
    -The shield can only defend against up to B rank elemental techniques and A rank ninjutsu/taijutsu techniques.
    -The sleeves can only extend to mid range.
    -The lower part of this manga page explaining how it work as a shield:

    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    What is this? a shield that protects you, or form a ball around you? forming a 360 degrees defense has been done countless times so i'm not going to allow that, if it's a shield that can be made to either one of the angles around you then ok, but not all of them, i mean like in front of you, above, below etc, remove that whole sleeves of a monk thing, it makes no sense and should be made into another technique separately, right now this is 2 techniques crammed into one, also why is this Mid ranged? o_o make it Short ranged.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 06:48 PM.

  12. #2152
    Ouacus's Avatar
    Status
    Ouacus is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Jun 2011
    Posts
    7,485
    Location
    In my house :P
    I'd rather regret the things
    I've done than regret the
    things I haven't done.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Suiton: Mizu seiun) - Water Release : Water Nebula
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: After concentrating their chakra into the water and doing the handseals: Ram → Tiger → Boar, the user creates two columns of water, which rotate around each other and forms a helix that pushes the opponent with huge force, causing massive damage.

    Notes:
    - Water source is required
    - Can only hit a single opponent
    - Can only be use 3 times in a battle
    - Can only be taught by Ouacus
    Picture of jutsu:

    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Where are the columns of water made exactly, the opposite sides of the opponent's direction? in front of the opponent? you have to specify that exactly in the technique's description itself, also remove that "huge force" thing.


    (Futon: Eariaru Fōze ) - Wind Release : Aerial Phose
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: After doing the Hare → Dog handseals, swinging both of his/her hands in a circular motion around himself/herself, they then release a sphere of wind which starts from around their body and tears apart surrounding obstacles and damages the opponents which are within range. Its also blows away any incoming projectiles and weaker jutsu.

    Notes:
    - Can only be use 3 times in a battle
    - Can only be taught by Ouacus
    Picture of jutsu:

    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Similar to cannon techniques, like the "Wind Release: Peacock Whirlwind Formation" and the "Wind Release: Wind Sickle Armor", also 360 degrees protection like techniques won't be approved anymore.


    (Futon: Tenchi Bankai) - Wind Release : Spinning Dist of Heaven and Earth
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: COncentrating their chakra into either hand, the user will slam his/her hand onto the ground sending their chakra out of their hand. A pillar of their chakra will then rise up into the sky, clearing it up if there are clouds. Because of that, Any form of weather which comes from clouds is momentarily stopped while the clouds form once again.

    Notes:
    - The weather change lasts for 4 turns
    - Can only be use 3 times in a battle
    - Can only be taught by Ouacus
    - It can also be used with a weapon instead of the user's hand
    Picture of jutsu:
    [IMG]http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100624130636/dgrayman/images/1/10/Wood_seal.png
    The pillar is not red though[/IMG]

    _________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    I get what your trying to do, but it can't be done like that, someone could just overpower your technique making the clouds gather again, it's short ranged, meaning it extends 5 meters yet you say it rises to the sky? you can't keep the whether changed for 4 turns, i don't get why is this technique required when you can just shoot wind at the clouds and blow them away with the wind, there's no need for this.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 07:00 PM.

  13. #2153
    Alternative's Avatar
    Status
    Alternative is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Feb 2011
    Posts
    5,546
    Location
    Australia
    "Give it back," you
    lament. "I've had
    enough," you wail. You
    think I care? That is fate!
    This terrible, brittle, puny
    story is the real thing!
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Futon: Soyokaze Suteppu) - Wind Release: Zephyr Step
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: -
    Description: This technique is in a similar respect to the Peacock Whirlwind Formation technique. The user constantly expels wind chakra from their body, creating a current of wind which revolves around them. The purpose of the technique is to give the user extra maneuverability so they can become more agile with their movements, allowing them to swiftly move around people, small projectiles and "pillar based" techniques like tornadoes. If used on a person, the velocity of the current can knock them off their feet.
    Notes:
    - Can only be used five times a match.

    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Even though it's a rip off of a cannon technique, the one you mentioned i like it, but needs more explanation, the way it is now means that it's a wind sphere made around you that just aides in your maneuverability, i don't allow 360 degree defenses so that has to be changed, i know that's not the reason you want this technique for, but still it has to be taken into account, the description of the technique itself has to clearly mention all it's effects, mention that it doesn't boost your speed in anyway.


    replacing CW found here

    (Serēnogurōbu) - Sereno Gloves
    Rank: B
    Type: Weapon
    Range: -
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: - (+15)
    Description: Otherwise known as Unbreakable Fists, the Sereno Gloves are a special brand of gauntlet worn by the user. The backs of the gloves are lined with a chakra-reactive metal, mostly used to defend against blades and other weapons. The chakra reactive metal is used to reinforce the gloves to strengthen them, which is why they are considered unbreakable. The strengthening could be compared to the high-speed healing of a medical ninja, constantly reinforcing the gloves with chakra. Another feature is that the gloves hold is that they have special apparatuses which resemble boosters. The user can channel chakra into these boosters so that for a split second, they can amplify the speed of one's punches, increasing the rank of punching techniques by one rank when used.

    ________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    So this boosts "punching techniques" with 1 rank, +15 isn't 1 rank increase, +20 is, you should either keep the +15 and remove the 1 rank boost, or just remove that damage boost and leave the 1 rank increase, and state that it boosts Taijutsu techniques that uses your hands, punching techniques is vague, mention that the speed boost of the punches can be tracked by normal eyes and reacted to as well, other than that there's nothing wrong with it.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 07:10 PM.

  14. #2154
    自殺バスタード Sonnelion's Avatar
    Status
    Sonnelion is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Nov 2012
    Posts
    1,144
    Location
    Hell
    Emo
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Sonnelion View Post
    Ninja Art:Nail Storm(Ninjutsu:Tsume No Arashi
    Type:Attack
    Rank:E
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:5
    Damage:10
    Description:The user will simply perform the dragon hand symbol then open their mouth releasing chakra in the shape of sharp nails.
    Notes/Restrictions
    ~Can deflect normal thrown weapons
    ~Can cut but only a maximum of an inch
    ~Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    ________________________
    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
    Similar to the cannon techniques of Hidden Needles, and Nail mist pierce.


    Ninja Art:Nightmare Tecknique(Ninjutsu:Akumu No Jutsu)
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:E
    Range:Short
    Chakra:5
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user will perform the dog handseal then clap hands together as they do this 3 demon like figures will appear with weapons that will charge at the enemy once in front of the enemy it they will poof creating a distraction and blocking view of opponent.
    Restrictions/Notes
    ~Lasts for one turn
    ~Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    ~Can only be used once per battle phase
    ~Require 1 turn breaks
    What they look like.



    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    What are the demons made of exactly, pure chakra? or are they simply illusions, i gotta be honest with you though, there are genjutsu techniques that can do what this technique does exactly and even better, like the flower petal escape technique for example.
    Resubmitting
    B]Ninja Art:Nightmare Technique(Ninjutsu:Akumu No Jutsu)[/B]
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:E
    Range:Short
    Chakra:5
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user will perform the dog handseal then clap hands together as they do this 3 demon like figures will appear composed of chakra like an illusionary clone, with weapons that will charge the opponent poofing as soon as they get close to the opponent blocking their view with black and gray smoke blocking the opponents view allowing the user to attack.
    Restrictions/Notes
    ~Lasts for one turn
    ~Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    ~Can only be used once per battle phase
    ~Sharingan and Byakugan users are capable of seeing the opponent.
    ~Require 1 turn breaks
    What they look like.



    _________________________
    ✘ Approved ✘
    Added a note and edited the description slightly.


    Ninja Art:Evil Transformation(Ninjutsu:Aku No Henkan)
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:E
    Range: Short
    Chakra:5
    Damage:10
    Description:The user will perform the tiger hand seal then clap their hands together following as this is done chakra will be sprout from all over their body hardening within seconds to form a black and white shield around them.
    Restrictions/Notes
    -Can only be used twice
    -Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    -Lasts 2 turns
    Abilities
    -Boosts the users speed by half their normal speed
    -+5 to attacks
    -Deflects/Protects against thrown projectiles(Normal)

    __________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    ._. +5 to attacks? speed being boosted? what? there's no valid reason for the things your mentioning, just because what your gathering chakra? don't resubmit


    Heaven/Hell's Call(Ten Ka Jigoku No Yobidashi
    Rank: C
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: NA(+15 When ability Active)
    Damage points: 30(+5 When ability active)
    Description:They are a pair of similar claw type of weapons that are made of chakra metal,steel,and iron making them incredibly strong.Hell's call is a gauntlet that runs the length of the user's forearm and is covered in skulls and has the ability to heat up,once chakra is imbued,and set ablaze with 3 oot blades except for the middle one which is 3"4" inches long that once imbued it can extend it's blades to 4 feet.
    Heaven's Call is a golden gauntlet that runs the length of the user's arm with a jewel in the center that the user can channel chakra into it and blood red eye at the bottom will create a shield and glows a white color when activated and the claws can fire off at the opponent at an incredible speed,nearly invisible to the human eye,that can be imbued with chakra as well giving it the ability to shock the opponent if it comes in contact with the opponent.The gauntlet will be covered with lightning when imbued.


    Restrictions
    -Imbuing can be used as long as the user has enough chakra
    -Shield can only be used twice
    -Can be used at the same time
    -Imbuing lasts for one battle phase
    -Shield lasts as one of the users turns per battle phase
    -Heaven's Call can launch the claws as long as the user has chakra.(+4 to chakra cost to launch claws)
    Notes
    -Must summon from a scroll kept on the user
    -Must mention in bio if you have permission to use
    -Can only be used by/get permission from Sonnelion
    -Costs 2 chakra to summon it from scroll
    _________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    the claws are a bit big for a small claw type weapon like that, remove being nearly invisible to the naked eye, define that "incredible" speed that the claws can travel at, give the firing claws a rank and a usage limit, also the shield, where can it be made exactly? in front of you? around you? i won't allow 360 degrees shield protection, techniques like that have been done constantly, also give the shielding ability a rank and a usage limit, is the gauntlet itself gets hot or just the claws? because of it's the gauntlet then your going to burn your arm.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 07:22 PM.

  15. #2155
    Vēx's Avatar
    Status
    Vēx is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Jul 2012
    Posts
    9,405
    Location
    Bikini Bottom ;3
    #JanaIsAwesome!
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    The Power Pole
    Type:Weapon
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:40 on activation, -5 per turn
    Damage:N/A -5 to the user when it is activated
    Description:The power pole is a red staff made of wood from a strange tree. The tree was infused with the chakra of a dying man, absorbing his life force and chakra as well. The staff is blood red in color, and feasts on the user's blood whenver one of it's main abilites is used as a sacrifice and when it is intially activated. (5 damage to the user). The material the staff is made of is unbreakable by normal means, the user can use it as many times as possible without the wood tarnishing in anyway. It is also quite flexible, and can bend very easily. The staff's real ability however is in it's ability to harness katon chakra. The sword does not simply channel and boost katon chakra, it eats flames. The staff however cannot eat natural katon chakra not produced by fire. It can eat only up to B rank flames. The staff can absorb and re direct the flames making them even stronger (increase by one rank). The staff can also be extended at will, but like every other ability it holds, it requires a blood sacrifice (5 damage to the user). It can extend to long range when the user yells "Power Pole Extend!", surprising the opponent. It extends at speeds twice that of a thrown kunai.

    ~Restrictions~

    -Requires a blood sacrifice for every time it's abilites are used.-
    -can only be used for a duration of 4 turns-
    -Can only absorb fire jutsu 3 times-
    -Can only extend thrice per battle-
    -If anyone other than PresidentBush tried to wield this staff, then it would automatically go into a feeding frenzy as soon as that person touched it, drinking all their blood uncontrollably. That is unless PresidentBush himself gave the person permission.-
    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Sorry no elemental boosting or absorping CWs are allowed anymore, too many have been done already, also you speak about a staff and half way in the description you mention a sword lol.


    Katon Yo Mama!
    Type:Defense
    Rank:B
    Range:Short
    Chakra:20
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user will first pull out a scroll, and concentrate katon chakra into it. An image of an average looking mother would then appear. The opponent should then recoil in shock at seeing someone's mother. This would give the user time to attack the opponent.

    Restrictions

    -Usable once-
    -Taught only by PB-
    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Why would your opponent recoil in shock when seeing someone's mother? core of the technique doesn't make any sense, it can't even be done by genjutsu, just Sharingan genjutsu can force your opponent to do something and custom Sharingan genjutsu are banned.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 09:51 AM.

  16. #2156
    Luther's Avatar
    Status
    Luther is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Sep 2011
    Posts
    10,652
    Location
    Hungary.
    Premeditated Murder.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Samontekunikku: Barusa no Rioneru· messhi)Summon technique: Lionel Messi of the Catalans
    Type: Offensive and defensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Lionel Messi is a male binturong and the boss king of the other summons. He weighs 100 kilograms and is 7.00 feet in height at full stance, due to him being a binturong a specie which lives in the forest and climb high trees] he is good at jumping and is able to jump more than 20 feet into the air. He has rough scaly barks which enable him to defend against [a rank] jutsu and below. He carries 7 katana with him on his back along with several ninja tools. He is capable of using Wind [without hand seals] And Lightning. He has also mastered ninjutsu and is able to perform the basics up to his rank.[Rasengan and shadow clone] Due to his body appearance he is able to hide himself in the battle field and blend in easily , but can easily be located by any sensor or dojutsu, he is capable of carrying a maximum of two people on his bark due to his high level of endurance, he is able to speak English and can communicate with his summoner and other summons telepathically. He is normally summoned as a last resort by the user or when his life is in danger.
    Note: Last for 4 turns
    Note: Must have learnt jutsu to use.
    Note: Defending against jutsu count as 1 move.
    ________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    OP, can block A-rank jutsu of anything? too much man i won't even allow him to be impervious to 1 elemental techniques of A-rank and below, choose only one element, not 2 and mention up to what rank can he use and does it include the ones that require handseals as well, remove the ninjutsu and speed reference, remove hiding and blending, remove the telepathic ability, mention that he's only summoned once, dunno how he would be able to wield those swords but ok ._. and lol Lionel Messi as a summon, i'm guessing he wouldn't like that very much


    (Chikyū no sutairu: Dōro-bashi)Earth style: Road Bridge
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs the rat and dog hand seals and then slams his two palms unto the ground bringing forth a long narrow road made of earth which uproots from the ground and extends up to long range from the user default position [short range], the road can extend to as much as 40 meters long and can be created anywhere on the terrain, it also can be destroyed by the user at any point in time.
    Note: Can be done twice in a battle
    Note: Last for two turns
    __________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Similar to a cannon technique called tunneling technique, and a CJ made long ago by Faith.


    Quote Originally Posted by Thunderbolt View Post
    Mākā:Marker
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Marker is a tall sword made of titanium,which weighs around 14-20 Kilogram , it has a golden handle which the user holds to wield the sword during battle. The sword is quite long and about 6 feet in height and cannot be broken or shattered by the opponent. It has a unique power of marking its targets. In short, when hit or struck at successful at the opponent ,the sword marks the opponent and copies it chakra signature making it unable for the user to hide in the battle field. The sword provides some offensive means to and when swung can create blast of wind [A rank] which he uses to deflect against kunais and enemy opponent.

    Note:The sword Lasts for three turns.
    Notene Blast counts as a move in one turn.
    Notenly thunderbolt can wield the sword.

    Removed the slash and made it more realistic.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Swords that produce elemental blasts have been done countless times before. If this is a CW why does it only last 3 turns? if it only lasts that long, whats its use? Its a pointless sword.
    Mākā:Marker
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Marker is a tall sword made of titanium,which weighs around 14-20 Kilogram , it has a golden handle which the user holds to wield the sword during battle. The sword is quite long and about 6 feet in height and cannot be broken or shattered by the opponent. It has a unique power of marking its targets. In short, when hit or struck at successful at the opponent ,the sword marks the opponent and copies it chakra signature making it unable for the user to hide in the battle field. The sword has great strenght and can be used to cut earth -based jutsu [A rank and below]

    Note:The sword Lasts for five turns.
    Notenly thunderbolt can wield the sword.
    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Why didn't you bold the changes about "cutting earth based jutsu of A-rank"? that could be taken as an action to trick us, you are supposed to bold all the changes and you didn't, Anyway i'm letting it go this time, remove being made from titanium, it's a CE that's made by -Mugen- and i'm against having it as material of your CW, cutting through techniques has been done constantly before, Copies the opponent's chakra signature? o_o sensing ability? remove that, basically the whole description needs to be worked.


    I made all the edits, i increased it turns and i removed all those gibberish about elemental blasts. Thanks.

    Summon Approval Link:http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post8869053
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 10:13 AM.

  17. #2157
    Rayder's Avatar
    Status
    Rayder is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Dec 2011
    Posts
    9,412
    Location
    Dragonstone
    yu wan shum
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Raiton: Raikou Taka Genkotsu | Lightning Release: Lightning Hawk Fist
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 50
    Description: The user channels a large amount of lightning around one of his fists. The manipulated lightning takes the shape of a small hawk with wings. It can be used to jab & cut your opponent if in close combat or it can be fired as a projectile.

    Note: Can only be used twice per match
    Note: Can only taught by Danzo Auditore De Firenze
    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Incorrect damage info, it should be "60" for A-rank not "50", define the exact size of the hawk.


    (Raiton Daikin Nami) – Lightning Release: Electropositive Surge
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A (-30 against the user)
    Description: The user will channel their raiton chakra through out their chakra system and release it into an intense electropositive surge around their body. The surge damages the user and gives them a strong electropositive charge. This electropositive charge means any A-Rank or lower Lightning jutsu directed towards the user will be immediately repelled due to the user’s charge being the same as the incoming attack. Incoming raiton attacks simply choose another trajectory away from the user and aren’t actually neutralized by this jutsu.

    Note: Polarization lasts for two turns
    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Can only be Taught by Danzo Auditore De Firenze
    Note: No other Raiton jutsu in the same in the same turn its used
    ______________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    This is a rip off of Nagashi with adding the positive charge, so it won't be approved.


    (Raiton Taizen Boufuu) – Lightning Release: Calm Storm
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user focuses their chakra into materializing lightning which is extremely high energy instead of focusing on its penetrative nature. This high energy Lightning is then formed into a condensed ball between the user’s palms and released into rotating stream of lightning which resembles a stream of fire in shape. Due to the high amount of energy in the lighting, it will send a massive amount of energy through the opponent’s nervous system on contact, causing severe upper body paralysis for one turn (this is from the waist upwards). The Lightning is so high energy it can be used to demagnetize metals. However, due to focusing on its energy level rather than penetrative abilities, this lightning loses its strength against Earth and becomes neutral.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle
    Note: No Lighting Jutsu in the next turn
    Note: Can only be taught by Danzo Auditore De Firenze
    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Lightning doesn't materialize, it's released either from your body, the ground or the sky by the clouds, the way this is is lightning released from your hands to form a condensed ball, then released as a stream towards the opponent or a "cannon" and i have a very similar technique called the "Lightning Release: Lightning Cannon".
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 11:56 AM.

  18. #2158
    Bloo's Avatar
    Status
    Bloo is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Feb 2012
    Posts
    73,406
    Location
    Dai-Gurren
    Ice Devil Slayer | Sage of
    Roses | Worst of the 2012
    Generation
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Mokuton: itsutsu yubi doragon) Wood Release: Five Fingered Dragon
    Type:Attack/Supplementary/Defense
    Rank:S
    Range:Short - Mid
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:
    The user will first submerge there hand into the ground. Then the user will grow a huge hand made of wood. The hand stands about 10 meters tall. The hand can be grown anywhere up to mid range. Instead of having fingers the hand has five dragon heads. Each head can be fully controlled by the user.

    - No wood above A rank next two turns.
    -Usable twice a battle
    -Can only be taught by Bloo


    Looks only just in wood.



    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Already exists.


    (Mokuton: Hishou Moku kinchou ) Wood Release: Flight of the Wood Birds
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short - Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Description:
    The user will first perform one handseal and hold there hand out, palm facing outwards. The user will then create and shoot out of there hand up to four birds. Depending on the amount of birds released the size will vary. One bird will have a four meter wing span. Two birds will have a three meter wingspan. Three birds will have two meter wing span. Four birds will have a one meter wing span. The user has full control of there flight patterns as long as its not overly complicated ( i.e loops, barrel rolls, etc.)

    -No A rank and above wood next turn.
    -Usable three times a battle.
    -Can only be taught by Bloo.
    ______________________________
    ✘ Leaving for Scorps ✘


    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Do these birds stay active? if so they need a chakra cost per turn to maintain. Also, what do they do btw? You produce them...then what?

    Updating this

    I gained ownership of the contract here

    Quote Originally Posted by Lokí View Post
    (Kuchiyose: gosai fi-to bu-bi) Summoning: Red Footed Booby
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his finger and with use of the blood performs one hand seal (Bird) and hitting the ground summoning One of the many Booby birds, The Red-footed Booby is the size of the Hawk summon owned by sasuke. It has red legs, and its bill and throat pouch are coloured pink and blue, and the flight feathers are black. When young it was brownish with darker wings, and pale pinkish legs. By training in the Bird land with the Blue Footed Booby and its Boss The Red footed has learned to use Fire Techiques however only up to B rank since it isnt as strong as its Boss but can use them without need of handseals due to the hard training it had in his land. It can carry one people, He can also speak English and has a great bond with the contract holder due to the time they spent together. He listens to any orders even when risking his life knowing his contract holder will never put him in danger. He can obiously fly.

    Notes:

    -Can only be summoned for 5-turns
    -Can only carry 1 person on his back
    -All of his moves count towards the users 3 moves per turn
    -Can be summoned even if there are other Booby bird on the Field, aslong as The Boss isnt. (Blue footed Booby)
    -Must be a signer or the Holder of the Booby Bird contract to summon.
    Looks:
    (Kuchiyose: gosai fi-to bu-bi) Summoning: Red Footed Booby
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his finger and with use of the blood performs one hand seal (Bird) to summon one of the many Booby birds, The Red-footed Booby is the size of the Hawk summon owned by sasuke. It has red legs, and its bill and throat pouch are coloured pink and blue, and the flight feathers are black. When young it was brownish with darker wings, and pale pinkish legs. By training in the Bird land with the Blue Footed Booby and its Boss The Red footed has learned to use Fire Techiques up to A rank and without need of handseals due to the hard training it had in his land. It can carry one people, He can also speak English and can speak to the contract holder and any signer telepathicly. He listens to any orders even when risking his life knowing his contract holder will never put him in danger. He can obiously fly.

    Notes:

    -Can only be summoned for 4-turns
    -Can only carry 1 person on his back
    -All of his moves count towards the users 3 moves per turn
    -Can be summoned even if there are other Booby bird on the Field, aslong as The Boss isnt. (Blue footed Booby)
    -Must be a signer or the Holder of the Booby Bird contract to summon.
    Looks:

    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    I'm ok with everything except the telepathic ability, so remove that.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 01-08-2013 at 09:38 PM.

  19. #2159
    Yugure's Avatar
    Status
    Yugure is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Nov 2010
    Posts
    8,373
    Location
    オーストリア
    This user has no status.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by -Severus Snape- View Post
    ~Resubmitting

    (Genjutsu: Sourubyū) | Illusionary Arts: Soul View
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user preforms a string of 3 handseals and release a burst of chakra towards the opponent(s), placing them under a genjutsu. As soon as the users chakra interferes with the opponent's chakra flow, the opponent will have the feeling that he leaves his body, and starts flowing towards the sky. As the opponent 'floats' in the sky he sees his body on the ground in a frozen stance, and vulnerable to attacks. In reality, the opponent stands immobilised on his place.
    Note: Can be used once
    Note: Lasts two turns
    Note: No Genjutsu in the same
    Note: Can affect multiple targets
    ||Declined|| Remove the bolded.

    ~Submitting
    (Hātoburēkā) | Heartbreaker
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Heartbreaker is a sword that belonged to legendary Davy Jones at one point and is Jack’s greatest weapon. Heartbraker is an indestructible sword, made by the Sea Goddess Calypso, and was given Davy Jones as a sign of her love for him. After Jones’ dead, the sword got lost, until a young ninja found the sword hidden in the sand on a deserted beach. For a long period of time the ninja used the sword as a regular sword until one day he channelled his chakra into the sword, and the sword changed into a metal whip. Upon practicing the young ninja found out that he could channel his chakra trough the sword, and use it for his own personal fighting style, Hoippu Geijutsu.
    Hearbreaker is in it’s sword form a simple double handed sword, with a blade that is 4 feet long. Because of the special metal that is used to make Heartbraker, it is very light and the user will be able to wield it both with one or with two hands as he desires. The metal has another special property, it conducts chakra.
    In it’s whip form, Heartbraker’s blade will split up in small fragments that create whip of 8 meters long. The segments are hold together by small strings of metal.
    Restrictions:
    - Can only be wielded by -Severus Snape-
    - Changing Heartbreaker’s form counts as one move

    Sword form


    Whip form


    ||Declined|| Conducts chakra? What is Hoippu Genjutsu
    ~Resubmitting

    (Genjutsu: Sourubyū) | Illusionary Arts: Soul View
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user preforms a string of 3 handseals and release a burst of chakra towards the opponent(s), placing them under a genjutsu. As soon as the users chakra interferes with the opponent's chakra flow, the opponent will have the feeling that he leaves his body, and starts flowing towards the sky. As the opponent 'floats' in the sky he sees his body on the ground in a frozen stance, and vulnerable to attacks. In reality, the opponent stands immobilised on his place.
    Note: Can be used once
    Note: No Genjutsu in the same
    Note: Can affect multiple targets

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Incorrect chakra info. This should also be B-Rank.

    (Hātoburēkā) | Heartbreaker
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Heartbreaker is a sword that belonged to legendary Davy Jones at one point and is Jack’s greatest weapon. Heartbraker is an indestructible sword, made by the Sea Goddess Calypso, and was given Davy Jones as a sign of her love for him. After Jones’ dead, the sword got lost, until a young ninja found the sword hidden in the sand on a deserted beach. For a long period of time the ninja used the sword as a regular sword until one day he channelled his chakra into the sword, and the sword changed into a metal whip. Upon practicing the young ninja found out that he could channel his chakra trough the sword, and use it for his own personal fighting style, Hoippu Geijutsu.
    Hearbreaker is in it’s sword form a simple double handed sword, with a blade that is 4 feet long. Because of the special metal that is used to make Heartbraker, it is very light and the user will be able to wield it both with one or with two hands as he desires. The metal has another special property, it conducts chakra once chakra is channelled into Heartbraker.
    In it’s whip form, Heartbraker’s blade will split up in small fragments that create whip of 8 meters long. The segments are hold together by small strings of metal.
    Restrictions:
    - Can only be wielded by -Severus Snape-

    Sword form


    Whip form

    Link to CFS, Hoippu Geijutsu

    ______________
    ±± Approved ±±



    (Katon: Shinseina hai) | Fire Release: Sacred Ashes

    Type: Supplemtary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: After performing a single handseal, the user gathers his chakra in his mouth, and will spit out a large amount of ash, covering the whole are up to Mid-Range. The ash will hide the user from the opponents view before it starts to float down to the ground. Even after the ash has landed on the ground, the users chakra will remain in it trough a connection via the users feet when standing on the ashes.
    ____________________________
    ✘ Leaving for Scorps ✘


    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    This is too similar to the cannon one.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 01-08-2013 at 07:41 PM.

  20. #2160
    Senior Member Mugen Ryukyu's Avatar
    Status
    Mugen Ryukyu is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Nov 2008
    Posts
    9,899
    Location
    umm nowhere especially not in ur closet hehe why would i be in ur closet and dont check ur closet
    Tell the truth, I won't listen
    to ya. Cuz I don't like being
    lied to
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Mugen Ryukyu View Post
    Link to approved Cfs - http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...&postcount=201

    (Kaji Bokushingu Sensu) - Fire Boxing Style
    Rank: N/A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: (Taijutsu rules)
    Description: The user raises their fists up close to their face and begins slightly hopping from left to right in place. By using this style, they must concentrate on their opponent at all times. And it has basically became a reflex to jab and dodge, making the user moves a little faster than average (nothing compared to gates speed). The user also is ready to block at will, since his fists are already raised to do so. In this style the user only uses punches and constantly shifts their feet to move at lightning fast speed being able to dodge attacks with ease. After they get into stance, they begin to create reserves of fire chakra into their hands preparing themselves to use various fire type blasts. So when they punch they release fireballs from they're fist.
    Note: Can only be taught by Mugen Ryukyu
    Note: being in this style involves a strong cardio system, so it's very difficult to maintain without getting exhausted.
    1- training session let's the user maintain for 2 turns
    2:3 - training sessions lets the user maintain for 5 turns
    5- 10 training sessions lets the user maintain for 10 turns
    A Master of fire boxing can maintain it for 15 turns.

    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing - Bringer Of Hell
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user begins by hopping in place then dashes at the opponent, once at top speed the user than leaps into the air towards the opponent and comes down on top of him releasing a huge burst of fire from his fist blasting the enemy backwards and resulting in serious burns.



    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    The gif doesn't look like a huge burst of fire


    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing - Bob & Weave
    Rank: N/A
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Due to the fact the fire boxing style only reaches upto mid-range this leaves users at a disadvantage in a long range bout, so to compensate. Due to the stamina/speed training the user begins to hop in place and becomes light on his feet and utilizes quick spins, ducks and side-steps to dodge incoming jutsu.



    ______________
    ~ First and Last Declined ~
    The rank of techniques cannot be N/A








    link to approved fighting style - http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...32#post7093832

    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user raises their fists up close to their face and begins slightly hopping from left to right in place. By using this style, they must concentrate on their opponent at all times. And it has basically became a reflex to jab and dodge, making the user moves a little faster than average (nothing compared to gates speed). The user also is ready to block at will, since his fists are already raised to do so. In this style the user only uses punches and constantly shifts their feet to move at lightning fast speed being able to dodge attacks with ease. After they get into stance, they begin to create reserves of fire chakra into their hands preparing themselves to use various fire type blasts. So when they punch they release fireballs from they're fist.
    Note: Can only be taught by Mugen Ryukyu
    Note: being in this style involves a strong cardio system, so it's very difficult to maintain without getting exhausted.
    1- training session let's the user maintain for 2 turns
    2:3 - training sessions lets the user maintain for 5 turns
    5- 10 training sessions lets the user maintain for 10 turns
    A Master of fire boxing can maintain it for 15 turns.
    __________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    I don't see any reason for having this technique honestly, remove that you dodge moves at lightning fast speeds, that's too vague and too much, why does it say that you can dodge and block and has damage points when it says it's "supplementary"? honestly i'd rather you not going for this.


    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing - Bringer Of Hell
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user begins by hopping in place then dashes at the opponent, once at top speed the user than leaps into the air towards the opponent and comes down on top of him releasing a small ball of fire half the size of the user from his fist blasting the enemy backwards and resulting in serious burns.

    ______________________
    ✘ Approved ✘
    Edited the description a bit.


    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing - Bob & Weave
    Rank: B
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Due to the fact the fire boxing style only reaches upto mid-range this leaves users at a disadvantage in a long range bout, so to compensate. Due to the stamina/speed training the user begins to hop in place and becomes light on his feet and utilizes quick spins, ducks and side-steps to dodge incoming jutsu.

    _________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Too vague, the way this is right now, you can duck, and side step any technique which is ridiculous, you could restrict it to Taijutsu or something similar, not Gates techniques normal freeform taijutsu and according to your speed.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 10:51 AM.

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •