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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Tiamat Umi no Megami) Summoning technique: Tiamat The Sea Goddess
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Tiamat is a white with sea greenish feathered bustard. The color of her feather is due to her affinity towards water element and hence called as Sea Goddess. She is capable of using water element up to the user's rank(The user requires to waive hand seals, if any for her). She is capable of shooting blasts of water bullets at the enemy (equivalent to A rank) from her mouth. She has also trained herself to use her beak and legs for attacking her opponents (and other summons).

    Note: Can be summoned once.
    Note: Lasts for 4 turns max.
    Note: Her abilities can only be used 3 times.
    Note: Tiamat's techniques count towards the users move count.
    Note: Can carry two persons on her back.


    X-Declined-X Well you cant perform hand seals for each other, that isn't allowed. Collaboration ninjutsu is fine but better explain that in the description.

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    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Tiamat Umi no Megami) Summoning technique: Tiamat The Sea Goddess
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user summons Tiamat one of the boss summons. Tiamat is a sea greenish blue bustard whose color comes from her affinity towards water element and hence called as Sea Goddess. She stands 40 feet in height and has a large wingspan. Due to the fact that she has large body and has strong wings, she is capable of carrying up to 3 people on her back without loosing much speed. She is capable of using water techniques up to the user's rank. She has the ability of shooting rapid blasts of water bullets at the enemy (equivalent to A rank) from her mouth. She has also trained herself to use her beak and claws as extra means of attack.

    • Can be summoned twice.
    • Lasts for 5 turns max.
    • Her abilities can be used 3 times.
    • Any techniques used by her count towards the user's move count.

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    mention how long her wings, using water up to your rank is a no, up to S-rank with no handseals is the maximum that i'm going to allow, make her summoned once, up to 4 turns, remove that restriction about her abilities can be used 3 times, that's vague, just restrict the amount of times she can use that rapid water blasts, mention how big the blasts are and how many are they.


    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Šamaš kōtei) Summoning Technique: Šamaš The Emperor
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user summons Šamaš The Emperor, one of the oldest bustard. He has a golden colored crest on his head as result of his fire affinity. He is a fairly large summon about as big as the Hawk Sasuke summoned. He is able to use fire techniques up to the user's rank as a result of intense training with the user. In addition to that, he has a special ability to absorb fire jutsu up to S-rank and release the same later at user's will. He can carry one person on his back at fast speeds with great maneuverability providing the user with good aerial skills and making them a hard target to hit. Just like Sin, Šamaš is also one of the fastest Bustards. He has trained himself to use his beak and claws as extra means of attack.

    • The number of times he can absorb a fire jutsu depends on the rank of jutsu & which he absorbs first.
      B-rank and below: 3 times (or)
      A-rank: Twice (or)
      S-rank: Once per battle
    • Can only be summoned once per battle.
    • Lasts for 5 turns max.
    • Any other techniques used by Šamaš counts towards the user's move count.

    Link of contract approval.
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    Up to S-rank fire techniques max with no handseals, remove the absorption ability completely, remove that whole "a hard target to hit" stuff, and the great speed, up to 4 turns max.


    (Yoton: Dai kazangan no Hashira Jutsu) - Lava Release: Great Lava Pillars Technique
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack\Supplementary\Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This jutsu is derieved from (Yoton: Yurasu no Kazangan) - Lava Release: Rock to Lava technique and advance version of it. The user gathers a great deal of chakra within their body as they surge it all throughout the ground and brings out large amount of magma from deep under the ground, changing the terrain to a fiery terrain of lava. Then by performing a single hand seal, the user causes multiple pillars of lava to erupt from it which rise up to 12 meters in height and are 2 meters in diameter. The numbers of lava pillars created depends on the user.

    • Can be used twice.
    • No S-rank lava jutsu in next turn.
    • Can be taught by -Avenger-

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    So this is a rip off of the Rock to Lava technique, and the Great Fire Flame Pillars technique crammed into one? ya not going to happen.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 11:00 AM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    aprroved cfs: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...53#post5738953

    Tsubaki no Hayashita Sennin: Yopparatta Kobito | Dance of the Bearded Sage: Toxicated Dwarf
    Type: Supplementary/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will unleash a fixed amount of hair from his body, towards a water source. Using the natural ability of hair, to absorb liquids, the user will further increase this with the help of chakra, making his facial hair work as a sponge, sucking up any liquid source his beard is making contact with. The liquid will be stored within his hair. The absorption can also occur with already-existing hair jutsus, meaning it can be combined with other Bearded Sage techniques. The absorption procces doesn't last long, though of course, the bigger source the longer time. Naturally it would be able to empty a big pond of water, within very few seconds. The user's running speed will be slightly altered when having absorbed a high amount of water, however it will also be functional as a potential water source for the user, for future use.
    ~ Useable three times per match
    ~ Must wait one turn before re-use of the technique
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    Too generic. Would enable you to suck up virtually almost any volume of water. Also, shoots hair? No...you would make facial hair grow and absorb water in contact with it. But the volume of your hair is directly related to the water volume you can absorb. So more water, more volume. Add that somewhere. And don't forget, the water would need to go somewhere if you want to absorb again.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Updating some old techniques. I can't quote them, as they're from the old thread, but I'll provide an exact link and a copy-pasted version.
    (http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post2619471)
    Wind release: Force wave = Fuuton: Chikara-ha
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This jutsu allows the user to defend against sound and frequencies, by bending the wind itself, the user can create an orb of bended wind, which will reject sound waves and frequencies. When strong and harmful sound or frequencies gets close to it, the wind will bounce outwards, like when you burst a balloon, and the wind will thereby carry the sound/frequencies away from the user, rendering them useless.
    Notes:
    • Can only be used three times per battle.
    • Can only be used once every second turn.
    • Only works on A-ranked techniques and below.
    • Can only be taught by ZeroG.
    (Fūton ♦ Kaminaritataku) – Wind Release ♦ Thunderstrike
    Rank: A-Rank
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This technique allows the user to defend against Sound by bending the Wind itself. By infusing chakra into the air, the user can create transparent shapes of wind that will reject Soundwaves by acting as shock-absorbers and redirecting the pressure. The user, applying the same concept on a larger scale, can also use this technique to compress attacks composed of some form of pressure, such as Sound and Wind. This can increase the power and density of the technique in question to such an extent that its rank is increased by one (1). Unfortunately, this also makes the technique in question much easier to avoid, given that it has decreased in size.
    -Can only be used three (3) times per battle.
    -Can only be used once every second (2) turn.
    -Can only be used to strengthen techniques of A-rank and below.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    X-Declined-X Remove the part where you increase a techniques rank or empower it in any way.

    (I know it's a lot of edits, but the purpose remains. I've just fixed most of the horrible spelling and grammar =/)

    Quote Originally Posted by Zero Kelvin View Post
    Resubmitting:
    (Ichitenkai) - One Point Release
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: A Taijutsu technique where the user takes control of their increased speed for a single moment, harnessing all of its power into a single punch or kick. While destruction on a great scale is the trademark of high-speed movement, this technique requires a great deal of finesse and skill. By using the joints in the arm and by moving one’s body with incredible precision, the user transforms the single, destructive attack into a focused, whip-like strike. Instead of breaking many bones or crushing entire boulders, this technique allows the single attack to solely affect the point it hits, in return for completely destroying that single point. It is possible to use this technique with enormous speed, increasing its power, but there's a limit to how fast one can move and still retain the finesse needed for this technique.
    -Can only be used twice (2) per battle.
    -No Forbidden-ranked Taijutsu techniques can be used during the following turn.
    -The user must be moving at Speed Level 15 to use this technique.
    -If the user's Speed Level surpasses 31, this technique can no longer be used.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    ~Declined. No speed chart references will be allowed~

    Re-attempting to edit an approved technique. The technique was approved in the old thread, so I can't quote it, but I'll leave the link and bold the edits.
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...postcount=3094

    (Fūinjutsu: Tōtemu Bakuyaku) – Sealing Technique: Explosive Totem
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user focuses chakra through his body, marking an object he's in physical contact with as a 'totem', causing a small, transparent sealing array to appear on the object. When the user activates it, the totem will use the chakra stored inside it to destabilize itself violently, causing an enormous explosion of chakra.
    -Can only be used two times per battle.
    -Activating the totem does not count as a move if it's done immediately after the seal is applied. Otherwise, it counts as a move.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    X-Declined-X Highlighted part is vague. From my understand array is a systematic placement of seal or explosive tags. The placement itself has a meaning or concept within it like explaining a seals number (Your techinque below) or placing an array in a manner it creates no opening for detection by means of chakra, there are numerous examples. Explain "Transparent sealing array". Furthermore, long range explosion? Why not just spread explosive tags and explode them when you wish?

    New submission:
    (Fūinjutsu: Akuta Fūjin) – Sealing Technique: Trash Seal
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 15
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user focuses chakra through his body, causing a sealing array to appear on an object or person he’s in physical contact with. The seal can be odd-numbered or even-numbered, depending on the user’s specifications. The seal has no function in and by itself, but can be a valuable ally to one who wishes to cause an imbalance in a seal.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    X-Declined-X Do not resubmit. Yes im a sealing expert this is the first thing i learned. Yes i know how this works and what a sealing number is. No im not allowing this, you could perhaps wait till i possibly make fuuinjutsu more detailed.
    Re-attempting to edit an approved technique. The technique was approved in the old thread, so I can't quote it, but I'll leave the link and bold the edits.
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...postcount=3094

    (Fūinjutsu: Tōtemu Bakuyaku) – Sealing Technique: Explosive Totem
    Rank: A-Rank
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user focuses chakra through his body, marking an object he's in physical contact with as a 'totem', causing the Kanji for 'explosion' to appear on the object. When the user activates it, the totem will use the chakra stored inside it to destabilize itself violently, causing an huge explosion of chakra.
    -Can only be used two times per battle.
    -Activating the totem does not count as a move if it's done immediately after the seal is applied. Otherwise, it counts as a move.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.
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    Last edited by Xylon; 01-08-2013 at 04:36 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Raiton: Denki sonā) - Electric Sonar
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: 2.5 km radius (roughly 3 miles)
    Chakra Cost:20
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:User claps hands together, forms the hand sign Snake, and then presses their palm on the ground sending out a pulse of electric energy imbued with their chakra into the ground giving them the ability to know what general direction an opponent is in. It is a great counter against jutsu aimed at impairing vision, such as the Kirigakure no jutsu because no one has the ability to suppress the electrical pulses given off by the human body.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.
    Note: Is not effective against speed enhanced shinobi such as Maito Guy and Rock Lee.
    Note: Last for only three turns


    (Fuuton: Ryū no kami no ibuki) Breath of the Dragon God
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: short-long range
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: After making the rabbit, dog, and rooster hand seals the user sucks in a great lungful of breath through their mouth and then releases it through their nostrils sending a gale force wind at their opponent.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.

    (Fuuton: Junkan yōsai) Cyclical Citadel
    Type: Defense/Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: short-mid range
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: Similar to the Hyuuga's rotation, the user does the hand seals horse, dragon, snake, and creates a vortex of wind around themselves. Weapons and jutsu of the same rank or less are repelled by the wind, and if someone tries to blindly pass through the wind they will suffer damage. This jutsu last one turn, and can only be used twice.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.

    (Raiton: Nō meitei) Cerebral Inebriation
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: After rapidly making the hand signs Dog and Ox the user flows lightning based chakra to the tips of his index and middle finger on his right hand. When placed upon the back of the opponent's neck an electric shock is sent to their Cerebral Cortex, knocking out shinobi of the same rank or less while impairing those of higher rank.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.
    Note: As explained above shinobi of the same rank or lower are instantly KOed.
    Note: Shinobi one rank higher suffer disorientation, speech impairment, short term memory loss, and lack of concentration therefore they are unable to use jutsu A rank and higher for five turns and their speed is decreased by -10.
    Note: Shinobi two ranks or higher than my own suffer similar effects except they can use jutsu up
    to A rank but no higher for three turns and their speed is decreased by -5
    Note User must be just as fast or faster than opponent for jutsu to be used.

    (Raiton:Sutatikku shokku shōkōgun) Static Shock Syndrome
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: After rapidly making the hand signs Snake, Dragon, Sheep, Boar, Snake the user pours electricity from his open pores into those of his opponents sending needle sharp pain throughout their body.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.
    Note: For those of the same nin rank or lower the opponent suffers -10 damage points for three turns.
    Note: Weakens the visual acuity of opponents for three turns.
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    inaccurate templates, more than 3 techniques per submission, it's obvious you didn't even bother to read the rules before posting, so i'm giving you a warning right now because it seems this is your first time posting, if you break these rules again i'll ban you from the CJ thread for 3 cycles, and infract you for not following the rules.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Summoning Technique: Herupā
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will draw blood, perform a line of several handseals then he or she will thrust their arm downwards and Herupā The Servant will appear. Herupā meaning helper is a weak red cardinal from Aries. He has a black bill, black face and a vibrant red/pink body like most male cardinals. He can fly at speeds up to 30 mph. He is ruffly the size of your average adult parrot meaning he is the smallest in Aries. Herupā can speak perfect english and can sense chakra in a short range of him and his summoner whether it be underground or in the air. As soon as Herupā is summoned he begins to save up his chakra. Once per battle, Herupā can also release all of his saved chakra and disturb any genjutsu that may have been casted upon the summoner. After this is done, he poofs away.
    *Must have signed Red Cardinal Contract
    *Can only be summoned twice
    *The genjutsu can disturb up to A-Rank genjutsu if kept on the field for more than 3 turns
    *The genjutsu technique cost an additional 60 chakra from her summoner plus it counts as a move
    *Summoning him counts as a move also
    *The summoner will be dizzy after she is dispersed
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    Genjutsu: Serufu horobi no kōdo|Illusionary Art: Code of Self Damnation
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will release his/her chakra into a target of his or her choice. After, the user takes control of the target's vision and hearing. The user will project images of bright flashing numbers and letters followed by high pitched screeching noise. A sharp headache and dizziness are the effects of the flashing numbers and letters. It is flashing at speeds of 7 fps which can easily induced the mentioned effects. The letters and numbers also contain subliminal messages such as "Death awaits" and "You're weak". This can break the opponents will to fight if the genjutsu is kept in effect for a long period of time.
    *Can only be taught by Shade Dracova
    *Can only be used 3 times
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    It needs a medium to trigger the genjutsu, like handseals, light, sound etc, sound mediums being restricted to sound release users, remove the colored parts and reduce it's rank to B-rank.
    Resubmission:

    Genjutsu: Serufu horobi no kōdo|Illusionary Art: Code of Self Damnation
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will release his/her chakra into a target of his or her choice. After, the user performs the snake handseal as a medium to trigger the jutsu. The user will project images of bright flashing numbers and letters followed by high pitched screeching noise. A sharp headache and dizziness are the effects of the flashing numbers and letters. It is flashing at speeds of 7 fps which can easily induced the mentioned effects. The letters and numbers also contain subliminal messages such as "Death awaits" and "You're weak".
    *Can only be taught by Shade Dracova
    *Can only be used 3 times
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    Since you didn't bother to bold the changes you made about the medium and the handseal, i'm not going to approve it, reduce the rank to B-rank and make it "Short - Mid" Mid alone means it can't be performed in Short range, 1 handseal isn't good enough.


    New Submission:

    Dracova no shinigami āto: Shinigami no gurippu|Reaper Art Of Dracova: Reaper's Grip
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will engage the from a range by releasing compressed chakra through the sole's of their feet and leaning forward which sends them catapulting at the opponent. While he/she is moving quickly they will use their scythe and strike the ground in front of the target sending debri into their face. Without hesitation or losing speed, the user drops his scythe and grabs the opponent by the neck and releases a large concentrated mass of chakra into the opponents body. By doing this the user's chakra will interfere with the opponents chakra flow making it so the opponent molds chakra at a significatnly slower rate. The user grabs his scythe then jumps back before the opponent can retaliate.
    -Must be taught by a Grim Reaper or Master
    -The effect last for 3 turns.
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    What is this? a ninjutsu? genjutsu? Kenjutsu? your going to concentrate chakra into your opponent's body and slow the rate of their chakra flow being molded? you do realize that's the work of Gentle Fist right? don't resubmit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Illusion Art: Fast Forward (Genjutsu: Hayaokuri)
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will look in his opponent eye(s) and put them under a genjutsu. He will then manipulate his opponent senses and slow down his anticipation ability by performing the half tiger seal. This will cause the opponent to see everything in fast forward, and loose track of what is happening. The intensity of this genjutsu depends on the difference of rank between the user and the opponent.
    -Needs direct eye contact
    -If the user and the opponent are the same rank, the opponent will slow down by a little, and perceive 3 hand seals in the time needed to perform a single one.
    -If the user is one rank higher, the opponent will be slower by 6 handseals speed, 9 for 2 ranks higher etc. If the opponent is of a higher rank than the user, he will perceive the time needed to perform 2 hand seals as that needed to perform a single one.
    -Lasts 2 turns
    ___________________________
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    Similar techniques exist.


    Summoning: Zapdos of Thunder (Shōkan: Kaminari no Zapdos)
    Rank: S
    Type: Summon
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Description: Zapdos is a giant vulture, of the same size as Gamabunda. He is a Raiton master, and can use raiton up to forbidden rank. He can carry a full size Akimichi on his back (size of the Gedo Mazo). He is yellow in color, and his plumage is constantly disparaged. He can also perform hand seals with his claws, although the jutsu performed on the hand of the user, will be performed in the Vulture's beak instead. To summon him, the user will put his blood on the contract fan, perform the needed hand seals and swing the fan in the air above him. Zapdos will appear right above the user, already flying. He can speak in human tongue as well.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle
    -Must be Kage rank or higher to summon him, or one won't earn his respect, and he will fly away
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    Up to Forbidden rank lightning is a no, S-rank lightning max, how is he going to perform handseals with his claws and he's a bird? make him use S-rank lightning with no handseals instead, the same size of Gamabunta is too much, half Gamabunta's size is the limit for birds, being able to carry someone as big as the Gedo Mazo? lolwut? Gedo Mazo is bigger than Gamabunta, it doesn't make any sense, take that out.


    Signed the Vulture contract

    resubmitting:
    (Tegatana: Furashu Ken) Hand-sword: Flash Sword
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (-30 to user)
    Description: The Tegatana user will focus lighting chakra to his tegatana, which he can then extend up to mid range in front of him (in a straight line). The chakra is invisible to the naked eye (except the chakra enveloping the hand directly), but the opponent can hear a sound similar to the sound the chidori produces. As the chakra comes in contact with a target, a huge lighting bolt will flash for the duration of the blink of an eye from the hand of the tegatana user till the end of the blade. The sheer power of the lighting will cause an explosion, and the user will be hit by a shockwave propelling his body backwards and damaging him severally.
    -Usable twice per battle, once for each hand.
    -Usage will give the hand used with first degree burns.
    -User is unable to use raiton higher than B rank during the next turn
    (Tegatana: Furashu Ken) Hand-sword: Flash Sword
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (-30 to user)
    Description: The Tegatana user will focus lighting chakra to his tegatana, which he can then extend up to mid range in front of him (in a straight line). The chakra is almost invisible to the naked eye, but the opponent can hear a sound similar to the sound the chidori produces. The chakra extended from the tegatana is a straight line of chakra that needs to be directed to the target. As the chakra comes in contact with a target, a huge lighting bolt will flash for the duration of the blink of an eye from the hand of the tegatana user till the end of the blade. The sheer power of the lighting will cause an explosion, and the user will be hit by a shockwave propelling his body backwards and damaging him severally.
    -Usable twice per battle, once for each hand.
    -Usage will give the hand used with first degree burns.
    -User is unable to use raiton higher than B rank during the next turn
    ______________________________
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    So you chose to leave out Kiritsugu's checking?


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    ✘ You are hereby banned from the CJ thread for two weekly cycles, for trying to trick us by leaving out Kiritsugu's checking of the technique that can be found -here-, your ban will be lifted on the start of the third weekly cycle after this one. ✘


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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by elmage View Post
    (katon: jigoku supirittsu) fire release: hell spirits
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Shot-Long range
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user fires several large fireballs, five at most, that takes the shape of ghosts flying towards the target, if either of the fireballs impact on any physical object, it causes a massive explosion, incinerating everything within the explosions reach.
    - Can be used twice with a three turns interval
    - User cannot use fire for three turns
    - mastery of fire is required
    - Can only be taught by elmage

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    ~Updating technique~
    (katon: jigoku supirittsu) fire release: hell spirits
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: mid-Long range
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user fires several large fireballs, five at most, that takes the shape of ghosts flying towards the target, if either of the fireballs impact on any physical object, it causes a massive explosion, incinerating and destroying everything within the explosions reach. Due to the size of the explosion, if the technique is used at short range, the explosion would affect both the user and the target due to its blast radius.
    - Can be used twice with a three turns interval
    - User cannot use fire for three turns
    - mastery of fire is required
    - Can only be taught by elmage
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    Mention how far the blast radius extends to.


    ~new submissions~

    (Fuuton: shi hyoushi shippuu) Wind release: four binding tornadoes
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Long range
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user sends his chakra into the sky causing, and creates four large hurricane around the target, with the distance of either hurricane to the user is short range. the hurricanes pulls the air around the victim towards itself, hence, pulling the victim and at the same time the hurricanes close in on the victim, and as it does, the strength with which the hurricanes pulls the victim increases, and would join to form a massive hurricane that slices the victim rapidly, and delivering several cuts to the victim. The four hurricane takes about 5-7 seconds to be formed depending on the users mastery of wind, after which it will be difficult to escape it.

    -Can only be used once
    -user cannot use wind for two turns after the jutsu has been used
    -the user cannot use any S-rank jutsu in the next turn
    -Can only be taught by elmage
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    Overpowered, you say that you send your chakra into the sky then the tornadoes are made magically around the target? you also say it's away from the user by 5 meters, fix the description next time.

    Katon: inferuno kyuutai
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: the user sends his fire chakra towards his victim, he then creates an orb, of fire around the user, the heat inside the orb steadily increases as the user adds more chakra, then he finally performs the tiger seal and then orb explodes.

    - Can be used twice
    - No S rank in the same and next turn
    - No fire for two turns
    - Can only be taught by elmage
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    Fire cannot be materialized, the technique is very overpowered, and doesn't make sense, also next time fix your descriptions, because the way this is now is an orb that's made around you, as you mentioned it's made around the user not the opponent, and then heats up and explodes so it should kill you.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Sairensuburēkā) Breaker of Silence
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: N/A (40)
    Damage points: N/A (80)(+5 Kenjutsu)
    Description: This is an especially large, chakra-infused curved blade has been passed down through generations. This Zanbouto has a ring on its handle, resembling that of a Kunai, where the origin of the name comes from. Because of the sheer size and weight of the blade, it is normally carried on back, where it may be seen having bandages wrapped on it. The blade has a tremendous amount of power and cutting ability, although when the user is able to manipulate the chakra within the blade to undo the few bandages, which allow the Blade to unleash it true abilities.

    Abilities Notes:
    When the bandages become undone, the user is able to send an immense amount of their chakra into the blade because the sword itself is capable of storing chakra, In doing so the user can send various forms of powerful concentrated chakra at their target at enormous speeds. When infused with chakra, the blade radiates a bright white glow. When send powerful "shots" of chakra at the target which can destroy up to B-Rank defenses, the user is able to send three of these "shots/blasts" at a time. Also the chakra can be molded into various shapes and sizes (for example: a longer sword) which allows the sword strikes to reach up to Mid-Range. When infused with chakra, the blade can destroy up to B-Rank defenses due to its devastating power and force. The concentrated chakra strikes are that of an S-Rank attack. It roughly takes the user about the same amount of time to form one or two hand-seals to extends the blades full reach and range. Ultimately the size can vary depending on how much chakra is stored within the blade.

    -The style of this blade, is very unique as it is identical to that of a Giant Kunai Knife, that allows it's wielder to store chakra and ultimately release and manipulate the shape of it. It gives the user the ability to extend the reach and un-extend it's reach up to Mid Range. When unraveled, the word "Oni" can be seen engraved on the blade itself.

    -This blade is razor sharp allowing for stronger use of Kenjutsu.

    -This blade is made out of a composite metal that does not dull.

    -This blade cannot be destroyed.

    Restriction Notes:.
    -Can only be used or taught by Mizuke.
    -Chakra releasing counts as one of the three moves.
    -Chakra Techniques can only be used three times per battle.

    Note: For a picture reference, feel free to VM/PM.
    -Chakra Cost = 40 for chakra-based techniques
    -Damage = 80 for chakra-based techniques
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    No chakra infusable swords, and no chakra blasting swords allowed anymore.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Gecko
    Scroll Owner: Merita
    Other Users who have signed contract: No one until now
    Summoning Boss if existing: Will be added later
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Will be added later.

    Geckos have movable eyelids, making their eyesight wider than the average eyes. Their climbing skills, allied with their ability to walk on smooth surfaces and also upside down, make them an unique summon.

    Geckos' hunting are most based on ambuscade, making them a very silent animal by nature. They are also very fast, and together with the ability to take out their own tail to fool the enemy, they are very good escapees.

    They have elemental affinities for Earth and Water.

    Abilities for RP:
    -Proficient climbing and sticking to surfaces, can pretty much climb any sort of surface
    -Super prehensile tongue, (can extend and retract, and is strong enough to attack/ensnare the opponent)
    -Spiked skin, capable of extending out spikes to impale the opponent (This is a Narutoverse on their already spiked skin)
    -Autotomy (drop tail to fool the enemy; can be used as a Kawarimi)

    Gecko Tattoo



    Everyone that signs the Gecko Contract have this tattoo on their right forearm

    - Can only be taught by Merita

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    Geckos are basically Lizards, or a lizard subspecies, so unless you have permission from the owner of the lizards contract "Riku.." to make a subspecies of his contract, this won't be approved.


    Daiōtsuchi (Great Sledgehammer)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: N/A (+30)
    Damage Cost: N/A (+60)
    Description: The Great Sledgehammer is a weapon forged by Sunagakure's weapon specialists. Passed down through generations, this sledgehammer is really powerful. It weighs more than normal for sledgehammers, even it being smaller than the average. The hammer has a great raw power, able to shatter through rock with a single blow. But their power resides on its user's chakra.
    The hammer is very powerful itself, but can be more powerful if the user sends their chakra through it. The hammer don't coat the user's chakra in itself like normal weapons do, but actually conserve it inside, and liberates it in slow chakra vibrations. Those chakra vibrations reverberate through the hammer's body, and when it strikes a target, deals a powerful single blow.
    The chakra-based blows are able to pass through up to B-rank defenses and able to withstand other chakra-infused weapons.

    Restrictions:
    - Can only be used or taught by Merita
    - The user must wait 2 turns to deal a chakra-based blow.
    - 30 points of Chakra per chakra blow.
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    Closer to approval than any CW i've checked in this page, just limit the "chakra blow" into a rank, and add a usage limit, and remove that the hammer is very powerful in itself, remove the "able to withstand other chakra infused weapons" that's too generic and too vague. should be fine then.


    Feel free to edit anything if needed >_O
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Sheep
    Scroll Owner: Professor Sarutobi
    Other Users who have signed contract: none yet
    Summoning Boss if existing: None yet
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None yet
    Description and Background:
    While traveling the world Professor Sarutobi one day came to the nature country which had no ninja village of their own, only farms all across the island country. There is where Sarutobi found a sheep farm with a family that were often harassed by rogue ninjas from another land and were using the only thing they had to fight back attempting to make the sheep capable of defending them but so far had very little success. In exchange for helping them and killing the rogue ninja the family gave Professor Sarutobi the sheep they had been attempting to weaponize, bringing the sheep back to Iwagakure Sarutobi began breeding his own sheep and training them in the ninja arts with varying results.

    Behaviorally, sheep are gregarious, precocial, defenseless creatures. But what does that mean? Gregarious means that they flock together or like to be with a group. It is rare to see a sheep by itself because of their gregarious nature. Precocial means that they have a high degree of independence at birth. This means that they can stand on their feet shortly after birth. Sheep are defenseless for the most part against predators like coyotes and wild dogs. Sheep are also very selective in their grazing habits. Sheep have a split in their upper lip, with this they are able to pick the preferred leaves off of the plant.

    At one time all sheep were wild. Around 10,000 BC sheep were domesticated by the humans. Most of the wool breeds of sheep were developed from Moulfan sheep. Most of the hair breeds are similar to the Urial sheep of ancient times.

    As the animals were raised under tamed conditions, they went through several changes. On the outside the sheep began to develop more wool and less hair. The color of the wool and hair changed from brown and shades of brown to whites and blacks. Their ears became more of a lop ear than an erect ear. The horns that the wild sheep possessed were weakened and disappeared from many breeds. On the inside the sheep changed as well. These internal changes happened at both ends. The tails had less vertebrates, or bones than the sheep do now. Today's sheep also have a smaller brain than the sheep 12,000 years ago.

    So far the largest the sheep have seen growing to half of Gamabunta size, these were fed special chakra enhanced grain grown by Iwagakure's researchers. Most however are the standard size for sheep ( 125 pounds and 3 feet tall)




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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Winged-Lemur
    Scroll Owner: Saikyokage
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: Momo

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Momo) Summoning : Momo
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: 50
    Attack points: N/A
    Description: Momo is roughly the size of Gamakichi and can transform to the size of Gamabunta is mostly used for travel but is also useful in battle Hey Carries a pair of twin tanto on his back which he uses in battle he Can be summed in mid air and take fly for a speedy get away or if falling from the sky can catch you. He is also able to mimic the bodies of anyone perform hand seals and in theory replicate that ability, An ability adapted from the sharigan placed in his eye socket after losing a eye.
    • Can only be summoned once a battle.
    • Last Two turns.

    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: TBA
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    Winged-Lemurs aren't real animals, so they can't be approved, mythical creatures aren't approvable anymore as well, lol and Sharingan placed in his eye socket? =_=
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Zanji's permission: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...=3277&u2=14204


    Summoning Animal: Wyvern (Hiryu)
    Scroll Owner: Xylon
    Other Users who have signed contract: None
    Summoning Boss if existing: None
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None
    Description and Background: Wyverns are a rare species of reptiles often regarded as mythical. It’s a Draconic creature with 4 limbs, two legs and a pair of wings similar to its ‘cousin’ which gained much more attention ,the ‘dragon’ having 4-6 limbs and depending on the specie a pair of wings. Although similarities exist, wyverns are much different than dragons in both behavior and anatomy, more aggressive the previous in any manner while dragons are civil.
    Where the habitat of a dragon is generally close to the land, Wyverns prefer living in high altitudes like mountains and trees that have lived thousands of years. On rare occasions they would occupy abandoned buildings created by humans. Being reptiles, wyverns have a set of unique capabilities, something common in the animal group. Mating among wyverns is forceful, young ones are born in eggs and their gender depends on the amount of heat the egg received during development, wyverns tend to breath fire over their eggs to aid this. To protect the young one from the extreme temperatures, the scale-like shells of the eggs are heat/fire resistant.
    As they grow up, to sharpen teeth and biting strength for hunting, they practice over mountains by biting the rocks with their bare mouths. A fully grown wyvern would have the bite strength of approximately 2000 kgs (1200 kgs is an ‘average’ crocodiles bite strength), with teeth sharp and strong they rip off their prey with relative ease but more than that, platinum from the mountain rocks get attached in their mouths making their bites deadlier, the attached platinum when struck inside flesh causes metal poisoning to its preys where wyverns themselves are immune to it.
    Wyvern require a lot of food to keep their functions running, their gut bacteria digests food and release hydrogen which is stored in a separate bladder linked to the oeso****us. They use this hydrogen in two ways, breathing fire and flight. Having platinum stuck up in their mouths, wyverns could exhale hydrogen from their mouth which reacts with the platinum and oxygen in the air creature and combustion which released in the form of a stream of fire, (varying ranks, the method is natural therefore would not require any chakra cost or technique however, there is more to it). Wyverns have several characteristics typical of flight. The honeycomb structure of their bones allows them to be light, while retaining their strength. Huge hearts are also typical of flight, as chest muscles would need vast amounts of oxygen-rich blood in order to move the large wings. Although they possess large wings, the wing-span/weight ratio of wyverns is not enough for the wings to give enough lift. Their capacity to hold hydrogen further lightens them to fly, they can migrate in relatively high speeds by reaching a high altitude, having a huge heart and lung capacity makes them fully functional and buoyance keeps then above the air. Their anatomy makes them both agile and incredibly strong allowing it to lift objects 3x its original weight without losing any speed. Given their functions, their hierarchy is based on sizes. A larger wyvern would have more strength and capacity to hold hydrogen inside allowing it to breathe a larger body of fire. Since the hydrogen capacity, although they keep great reserves isn’t unlimited, there is a limit to how much fire they could breathe. Thus, going back to size in determining how strong a wyvern is in its wilderness. Lack of Hydrogen does not however affect flight since it has more to do with light weightiness then hydrogen.
    Wyverns are prideful creatures in nature, they consider snakes and reptiles inferior and their prey even worse. They have a competitive side when against dragons and would often spar to determine who holds supremacy as species. Although rare it is possible for wyverns and dragons to mate among each other and the offspring could be either a wyvern or a dragon, making it possible for a wyvern to have a dragon sibling. They do not allow humans to make contract with them in a superiority complex so long they are unable to overpower them fully. Humans would teach them how to communicate and control chakra although not being able to perform hand seals leaves the ability useless. But combined with their techniques, wyverns would get stronger as a summoning creature. Humans would draw sealing scripts and patterns over their wings (like orochimaru draws 3 tomoe over his snakes) allowing wyverns to channel chakra within them and induce basic illusions to whomever that looks at their wing patterns. These scripts would again be used for elemental combinations, by sealing elemental techniques prior to battle such as a wind blast which would be in conjunction to fire breathing.
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    Spirits of Balance: Reaper’s Wisps (Onryodo: Shinigami no Shiranui)
    Rank: S
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/a
    Description: The user release performs a series of hand seals (alternatively, release a seal that generates the technique) that forms six Will-o-Wisp’s around floating around the user. These wisps revolve around the user playfully making echoing sounds in little girls voice, the user is able to manipulate them to surround other people/objects similar to Scorch release: Extremely Steaming Murder. The wisps are harmless to humans, summoning animals and other beings, they act upon the users will or independently towards incoming threats. When released towards an object, upon impact the wisp burst into a huge white flame, the burning is fast but not instantaneous and anything that’s burned by the wisps (even water and fire itself, and nothing alive as stated above), is sealed inside the users consciousness until release. The technique is one of the several sealing methods of Onryodo, and takes the form of Will-o-wisps which is translated as Shiranui, the word shiranui also has the literal meaning of unknown fire which explains concept of the technique.
    Note: Last 4 turns, can only make 6 wisps per use.
    -Usable twice.
    -Can seal techniques up to S rank.

    (6 Wisps because its mythically ideal, 6 wisps appear mostly because the numbers affiliation to imperfection. And because many techniques shoot multiple projectiles and attack from different angles, not implying i can defend against 6 techniques with a single use)
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    Quote Originally Posted by Xylon View Post
    Sealing Technique: Dark Ecriture (Fuinjutsu: Yami no Chojutsu)
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10/turn)
    Damage Points: 10/ turn (to the user)
    Description: Dark Ecriture is a technique that allows the user to detect hidden seals within the users field of vision. The technique activates using a seal of confrontation following which many sealing formula appear around the users left eye. They then begin to sink inside using the lens which itself is a painful process where the user needs to keep his eye open. Once performed the seals inside the eye filter the users vision making everything appear grayscale. All seals however that are hidden or apparent starts to glow, the user is able to see the glow even if the seals are hidden behind objects or clothes. With added focus he is able to read them identifying their purpose.
    Note: Usable twice in battle, Lasts 4 turns.



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    Add that it can only detect seals up to its own rank.
    Sealing Technique: Dark Ecriture (Fuinjutsu: Yami no Chojutsu)
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10/turn)
    Damage Points: 10/ turn (to the user)
    Description: Dark Ecriture is a technique that allows the user to detect hidden seals within the users field of vision. The technique activates using a seal of confrontation following which many sealing formula appear around the users left eye. They then begin to sink inside using the lens which itself is a painful process where the user needs to keep his eye open. Once performed the seals inside the eye filter the users vision making everything appear grayscale. All seals however that are hidden or apparent starts to glow, the user is able to see the glow even if the seals are hidden behind objects or clothes. With added focus he is able to read them identifying their purpose.
    Note: Usable twice in battle, Lasts 4 turns.
    -Can only detect techniques up to its own rank.
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Genjutsu-Hitojichi) - illusion technique- Hostage
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/defence
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user induces the target into a strong illusion,instantly making them notice a kunai that is held to the neck,the kunai is wielded from behind the target by an exact copy of the user thus why in some cases the target doesn't know its an illusion,if they have lost sight of the user. upon noticing the kunai,the target hears threatening words,to be completely still or get their throat slit.
    -Once per battle
    -The target is held hostage for the period of 3 turns then the illusion disperses leaving the target unharmed.
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    So how exactly is this genjutsu induced? it needs something like handseals, and in general genjutsu requires you to know the target's location, if you don't you can't catch him in the genjutsu, and the paralysis isn't done like that, it needs something restricting to happen in the genjutsu, like a chain that wraps around him or something of the sort, but hearing a few words won't paralyze him, lower the rank of this technique to a C-rank or a B-rank, it's not complicated enough to be an A-rank.
    (Genjutsu-Hitojichi) - illusion technique- Hostage
    Rank: B
    Type: Attack/defence
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user makes a half-tiger seal,whilst inducing the target into a strong illusion,instantly making them notice a kunai that is held to the neck,the kunai is wielded from behind the target by an exact copy of the user thus why in some cases the target doesn't know its an illusion,if they have lost sight of the user(but the user still knows their current location) upon noticing the kunai,the target hears threatening words,to be completely still or get their throat slit(this is common sense,like having a gun pointed to the head and told not to move,you won't do otherwise unless you know you're hallucinating).
    -twice per battle
    -The target is held hostage for the period of 3 turns then the illusion disperses leaving the target unharmed.
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    what common sense? you can choose to move if there's a gun pointed at your head, in the genjutsu you can't force your opponent to do anything, so he can't be paralyzed like that, because he can choose to move, so this is an invalid method, making the genjutsu voided, if a chain wrapped around him would be be able to move his arms or legs? no, so that way he is paralyzed, i gave you a chance, don't resubmit.


    Quote Originally Posted by Magic.. View Post
    Custom weapon

    (akuma ha-pu)Demon harp
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short/long
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The harp is made from pure stainless steel but light in weight and is capeable of conducting chakra.its strings are four in number and each strings produces different sharp tone when stroked. Each tone brands it's listeners with a particular type of illusion .Also the harp acts as a barrier against illusion attacks thrown at the welder, whilst notifying him/her what kind of illusion it is. Because of it's portablity and stylishness,the weilder is able to strap
    it unto his or her back,whilst in battle.

    -Note: The user can't perform handseals whilst holding the harp.
    - the harp blocks
    illusiön based attacks,except advanced ones(forbidden or ms illusions) whilst in the user's possession.
    -illusion shielding counts as one of 3 moves a turn and can only shield 5 times per match.
    -Note: The harp can only be used by Seto Kaiba.

    Zero --> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...49356&u2=51542
    Ruko--> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...=5162&u2=51542

    X-Pending-X Im not quite sure about this, it would help if you had a background in either sound or music. And it lets you avoid most S rank Genjutsu.
    My opinion is 50:50 over this. Need another mods input here.


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    I was tempted to DNR this off the bat for the simple reason that you submitted a weapon that makes you immune to genjutsu without even explaining why or even considering any kind of side effect or restriction. Also, regardless of the permission from Roku and Zero, this would eventually be equal to their own techniques. Not to mention that the low depth and description of it is not befitting of the whole concept. So, basic idea: make this better and more reasonable.

    P.s I would make the tones as seperate jutsus,if approved^^
    Custom weapon

    (akuma ha-pu)Demon harp
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short/long
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The demon harp is an ultimate illusiön weapon forged out of lies and deceit,physically its made from pure stainless steel but light in weight and is capable of conducting chakra,hence since one has to eject chakra into a target to bind them in an illusion,the harp absorbs any foreign chakra before it injects itself into the head of the wielder ,hence why the harp acts as a barrier against illusion attacks thrown at the wielder, whilst notifying him or her what kind of illusion it is.its strings are four in number and each strings produces different sharp tone when stroked. Each tone brands it's listeners with a particular type of illusion,though the tones itself its just to catch the targets attention before the illusion that comes along,takes effectBecause of it's portability and stylishness,the wielder is able to strap it unto his or her back,whilst in battle.

    -Note: The user can't perform handseals whilst holding the harp.
    - the harp blocks illusiön based attacks,except advanced ones(forbidden or ms illusions) whilst in the user's possession.
    -illusion shielding counts as one of 3 moves a turn and can only shield 3 times per match.
    -The user can only use one tone per turn.

    Zero --> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...49356&u2=51542
    Ruko--> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...=5162&u2=51542
    P.s I would make the tones as seperate jutsus,if approved
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    (genjutsu-Kai no te) - illusion technique- hands of time
    Rank: A
    Type: supplementary
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs a snake handseal,whilst ejecting chakra into the brains of their foes nearby,making them think everything in their souroundings,including the user,as well as theirselves and everything the can see in general,has frozen(motionless),though it would seem like some kind of time manipulation jutsu was used,while infact,their vision of reality was paused and they were placed in a trance like state.
    -last for a turn
    -Once per battle
    -No s-rank and above genjutsu next turn.
    -Can affect multiple targets.
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    Too high a rank and you need more than one handseal to induce such an effect...
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Raiton: Raiton ekō | Lightening Release: Lightening Echo
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: -
    Description: The user begins by creating a surge of lightening in both hands, they then spread their arms out to reach each side as far stretched as possible, they follow by forcefully bringing both hands in clapping together having both surges mix and due to the force they spread out sending electrical currents throughout the area. Having to cover the whole field this does not have much impact on the opponent from mid range onwards but its main purpose is to create the similar but louder sound effect of the Chidori but covering the whole area drowning out any other noises.
    - Short Range will leave the opponent paralyzed for 1 turn
    - Last for 4 turns
    - Only taught by Method
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    If it's only for sound purposes then i'm ok with it, but remove the paralysis part, if you include that it would be similar to the lightning mineralization technique that's cannon, anyway what is the use of it? distraction?


    Katon: hō-ō | Fire Release: Fenghuang
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: After learning the truth behind Itachi's past, Sasuke believed his hands to be that which would bring down justice upon Konoha, his ability to summon Hawks had led him to create a new jutsu aside Kirin & had created one that suited not only his desire but also his Uchiha heritage.
    The user begins by placing their hands together & performing the Bird handseal, they then begin parting their hands as a small orb of fiery light appears & takes the form of a bird, the bird then flies up rapidly toward the sky expanding in size. As it reaches the clouds they begin darkening having explosions spread throughout. A enormous blaze of fire shaped as a Hawk then comes racing down toward the field at an immense speed, it heads straight toward the target towering over them in both height & width having them unable to see anything but a bright orange light as it reaches within close range & as it hits a large explosion occurs burning anything within Mid-Range. The blaze is hot enough to evaporate small sources of water, the explosion rips apart the ground while leaving behind a trail of fire within Mid-Range .
    - Only usable by Sasuke Biographies
    - One turn must pass until the Hawk begins its descent
    - Only usable Once
    - Can only be dispelled by Large A Rank Water Jutsu +
    - Unable to use Fire Jutsu for two turns from creation
    - Can only be taught by Method
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    Overpowered, and why would a large hawk descend from the clouds? Kirin is made because lightning can be released from the thunderclouds, fire can't be released from the clouds nor materializes, it either comes out of your mouth, hands or the ground, so that voids your technique, and "immense speed" is a vague term, and large explosion burning anything within Mid range? is another, honestly i was going to DNR it because it's ridiculous, i'm gonna give you one chance to tone it down and make it reasonable.


    Raiton: Raiton Tsume| Lightening Release: Lightening Claw
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user begins by performing two handseals (Bird - Dragon), They then place both hands on the ground sending there Lightening chakra through the ground at a fast pace, as it reaches underneath the opponent it erupts through the ground in the shape of a Large clawed hand that surrounds the opponent & closes in clenching itself. The opponent is caught within it & is electrocuted leaving them paralyzed. A 1 meter gap is in between the hand & the target.
    - The opponent is paralayzed for 1 turn
    - Only taught by Method
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    Remove a "fast pace", define the exact size of the hand that erupts, remove the "&" and write it normally, how would the hand and the target have 1 meter gap if it's coming down from underneath them? make it useable twice per battle, and no lightning techniques can be used in the same turn as restrictions.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 12:36 PM. Reason: Name Change

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Serpent View Post
    (Kchuysei: Kyoudai Youi) Summoning: Dark Brother
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A (+20 toxic bite) (+5 per turn after bite)
    Description: Hei, after being accepted as family with the Eels of "Unagiirie", Hei was gifted with a Brother known as "Dark". Dark travels with Hei everywhere he goes, always being by his side. Dark can be seen coming forth from under Hei's coat in a similar fashion to kabuto's Snake. when in battle Dark acts as an extra limb for Hei. His main form of attack is biting with razor sharp and jagged teeth that have toxic saliva that poison's the wounds numbing the infected area. The toxin will spread through the opponents body slowly paralyzing them until the opponent is no longer able to move. Dark has very thick but flexible skin allowing it to block up to B-Ranked Taijutsu.
    Note:
    -Can only be used by Serpent's Hei Bio.
    -Toxic Bite counts as a move.
    -Takes 6 turns to paralyze the opponent.
    -Must sign Eel Contract.
    ♠ Declined ♠
    Alright, I can kind of imagine this, but I need you to be slightly more specific. You state short range, so can your snake only bite people at close range combat? Also, can he separate himself from Hei or not?
    Also, add the fact it can only stay on the field for four turns.


    Eel Contract Link: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post4233355
    (Kchuysei: Kyoudai Youi) Summoning: Dark Brother
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A (+60 toxic bite) (+5 per turn after bite)
    Description: After being accepted as family with the Eels of "Unagiirie", The Summoner is gifted with a Brother known as "Dark". Dark travels with the summoner whenever summoned, always being by it's summoners side. Dark can be seen coming forth from under it's summoners clothing in a similar fashion to kabuto's Snake, when in battle Dark acts as an extra limb for it's summoner. Being able to reach out to a Mid-Range area, his main form of attack is biting with razor sharp and jagged teeth that have toxic saliva that poison's the wounds numbing the infected area. The toxin will spread through the opponents body slowly paralyzing them until the opponent is no longer able to move. Dark has very thick but flexible skin allowing it to block up to B-Ranked Taijutsu. Dark is unable to leave It's summoners side as he is bound by the Eels Summoning Tattoo.
    Note:
    -Can only be used Once per battle
    -Last 4 turns
    -Requires a 2 turn cool down.

    -Toxic Bite counts as a move.
    -Takes 6 turns to paralyze the opponent.
    -Must sign Eel Contract.
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    define the exact size of the snake, make the biting and releasing toxin as an ability and limit it's usage, and give it a rank, remove the damage for the toxin it shouldn't involve any if it only paralysis.


    Eel Contract Link: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post4233355

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    (Genjutsu: Shishou no Jutsu) Illusion Technique: Master Technique
    Rank: C - S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 15 - 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will make the fallowing handseals "Dog-Ram-Tiger-Snake" for this Jutsu. This technique is simply the use of generic Genjutsu used by Genjutsu Masters. After using the proper handseals the user will place their opponent within a Genjutsu of their choosing.
    Note:
    -Can only be used twice per battle
    -Must have mastered Genjutsu
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ______________________________
    ✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
    that can't be allowed.

    (Katon/Fuuton: Uchiha Iyoku) Fire/Wind Technique: Uchiha's Will
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 15 - 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will make a single handseal and release a powerful jet stream of wind that is difficult to detect because of it's intangibility. This wind has an highly concentrated and focused amount of fire chakra within it. Once this wind makes contact with it's target it will be forced to combustion causing it to burst out into flames that reach out and engulf everything within a short range area engulfing everything in it's wake. Doujutsu can see though this Technique easily.
    Note:
    -Can only be used twice per battle
    -Requires a 4 turn cool down
    -Can only be used by an Uchiha bio
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
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    This requires Yin/Yang training, because wind and fire chakra according to your description are released at the same time, if it's a stream of wind then you need to apply wind chakra constantly to the stream, which means you can't add fire chakra while releasing wind chakra, remove the "intangibility" and make it visible to normal eyes, make it more reasonable.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 12:48 PM.

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    (Hyouton: Okamibara Senzai) - Ice Release: Emperor's Rose Garden
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: First, the user will perform a set of handseals (rat > snake > rat > Ox) and then create a giant rose garden made of ice to surround, bind, and freeze their opponents, the giant ice roses start from the user as it's epicenter and spreading, they move in a circle radius around the user and outwards. The giant roses have meduim sized sharp thorns wich sprout out of them as they are created, being able to impale the target(s) aswell. This technique is not able to freeze a summon of Gamabunta's size, however they are enough to bind them in place and hold them off for a few moments aswell as deal enough cuts with the ice thorns to cause injuries, smaller summons like Gamakichi or sasuke's hawk would easily be frozen in place. This technique reaches a 10 kilometer radius from the user as it's intial/centerpoint area and outwards.
    - May only be used x2 per battle.
    - Must be taught by Loki to use.
    - Must be member of the Yuki clan.
    - No other ice techniques in the same turn may be used.
    - Only A rank and below ice techniques may be used the following turn.

    X-Declined-X The technique was fine, but 10 km radius? ._. so 20 km long technique? Im not sure if we're allowing 500m without a reasonable explanation behind it
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    This is my 2nd jutsu I'm submitting. My other one was already checked.
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    (Taiguronsamon: Nel ) -
    Tiglon summon: Nel

    Type: Summon/Supplementary
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: /
    Description:
    The user draws his own blood and either wipes it on his Tiglon tattoo or uses the summoning technique in order to summon Nel, a warrior Tiglon. Unohana takes on the typical look of a tiger but with a small clean mane along with a thick, gold cuffling around her neck and a small one around her tail. Around her paws hers fur is very thick and take on the shape of angel-like wings, which allows her to fly but at speeds 1 ranks below it's summoner. When she is first summoned she's small enough to fit on an average sized man's shoulder. And like all the other Tiglons she's able to communicate with the summoner via telepathy. She is also noted to be the only Tiglon to be able to walk on it's hine legs to function.
    Abilities
    Nel's abilities are more of a "support" type, she is able to use Genjutsu up to A-rank and Taijutsu up to B-rank. Along with that she is able to feel her summoners chakra flow in a "sensing" type of way and force chakra into him/her in order to free them from A-rank and below genjutsu.
    Anytime in battle Nel can "expand" herself to become a full sized Tiglon that stands twice as big as a horse. This allows the summoner to ride her instead of her riding the summoner. Nel is known to move at speeds equal to a Sannin Ranked Taijutsu specialist.

    - Only taught by william24
    - only summoned once per battle and lasts 5 turns
    - Breaking summoner out of genjutsu counts as a Kai
    - Only knows when the users in genjutsu when in contact

    X-Declined-X Chose either Genjutsu/Kai or Taijutsu/Expansion

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    (Katon: Mini-en gōremu ) -
    Fire Release: Mini Flame Golems

    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    The user first kneads katon chakra within his gut followed by spewing out flames but using shape manipulation to instantly mold the flames into several (up to 6) solidified golems of fire. Each golem will stand about 4 feet tall and have tiny tails. The golems can all spew out streams of fire that reach long range and equal to B-rank fire. At any moment the user can perform one hand seal thus detonating any chosen golem(s) and causing severe damage to anything in close range.

    - Only taught by william24
    - Can only be used 2x
    - Using the streams of fire count as an allotted jutsu per turn.
    - Detonating any amount of golems count as a jutsu per turn. I.e. If the user explodes 4/6 of the golems at once, that only takes up 1 jutsu.

    X-Declined-X Solid fire?
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Katon:Kara makai)Katon - Fire Style: From Hell
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: B Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20 Chakra
    Damage: 40 Damage
    Description: The user has get up close and channel their chakra to the oppenet head while do so they comprese their fire chakra then release fire all through out there body killing them.
    Note:Can Only be taught by Virus..

    X-Approved-X


    (Suiton:Hiyayaka Suiton) Water Style-Cold Water
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 20 Chakra
    Damage: 40 Damage
    Description: The oppenet channel their suiton chakra through their lungs then make sure suiton sticky syurp and is cold by adding cool air they then spit out onto ground allowing trap their oppenet and freeze their feet when release the jutsu their feet be nub and won't be able to move.
    Note: Their feet are only nub for two turns
    Note:Can Only be taught by Virus..


    X-Approved-X
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Rohasu View Post
    Water Style: Hidden Dragon Claw [Suiton: Kakusare Ta Doragon No Tsume]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: The user will channel his/her suiton chakra into thier feet then channel it from their feet under the ground, they then form it into a dragon like claw that is roughly the size of a grown adult, the user then from under the opponent rises the claw from underground and hits the opponent with the claws causing sever cuts on the both of the opponents arms and the opponents chest.
    Note: can only be used 6 times per battle.
    Note: The user can only use 1 water jutsu the following turn, but after that turn the user can use more than water jutsu again.
    Note: Severity of wound on opponent causes long times for forming hand seals (roughly about double the time).
    Note: Can use a large water source to create a bigger version of this jutsu to use on summonings.
    Note: Can only be taught by Rohasu.
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    Colored parts need grammar fixing to be understandable, remove using a large water source to create a bigger version of the technique, you can submit an advanced version of the technique after it's approved, but i won't allow any size alterations in the same technique, make it useable 4 times per battle, reword the second restriction making it "Only 1 Water technique can be used the following turn after this technique is used"
    Resubmitting:


    Water Style: Hidden Dragon Claw [Suiton: Kakusare Ta Doragon No Tsume]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: The user will channel his/her suiton chakra into thier feet then channel it from their feet under the ground, they then form it into a dragon like claw that is roughly the size of a grown adult, the user then rises the claw from underground and hits the opponent with the claws causing a deep cut on the both of the opponents arms and the opponents chest.

    X-Approved-X Removed the restrictions
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Katon: Tenka Kasui) - Fire Release: Ignition Stream
    Type: offensive/supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra: 10
    Damage: N/A
    Description: After performing snake->boar->horse->tiger, the users cheeks inflate and from their mouth the user sprays a flammable liquid along the ground. Once it comes into contact with fire, the liquid ignites into a large stream of fire.

    Restriction:
    -Can only be used by fang and those taught.

    (Raiton: Ikazuchi Boutou) - Lightning Release: Thunder Boom
    Type: offensive
    Rank: D
    Range: short
    Chakra: 10
    Damage: 20
    Description: The user concentrates their chakra and then hits the enemy by firing a wave of small lightning bolts that explode on contact. The explosion can force the enemy back.

    Restrictions:
    -Can only be used by fang and those taught.

    X-Both Declined-X Generic techniques
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 01-08-2013 at 02:29 PM.

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