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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Ichigo Haineko) - Strawberry ash cat
    Type: Weapon
    Rank:S
    Range: short-long
    Chakra: 40(+10 each turn the blade is dissolved)
    Damage: N/A
    Description:Haineko is a large sword in the shape of a flat strawberry, with the leaves as "tips". It has very rough texture and smooth sharp edges, and it could be used as a fan because of the shape and size. The user channels their chakra into the sword, and the blade of the sword will break down into many grey little pieces of sharp blades. To the opponent, it would look like as if the blade itself is dissolving in thin air. The blade particles can become a grey cloud, and with the handle, the user can control/manipulate the particles as little blades by swinging it. Depending on the direction the wielder swings the handle, the cloud of blade particles will move in that direction. If the particles happen to be within close range of the opponent when the user swings the handle, the small blades will begin slicing into the opponent, shredding them. The user can also reform the blade back to normal simply by canceling his chakra flow from the handle.

    Restrictions:
    - Only ~Khallil-Sama~ and those who he allows may only use this weapon.
    - The blade can stay in its "dissolved" form for up to a maximum of two turns.
    - Once the blade has returned back to its original form, the user must wait two turns before they can use its ability again.
    - The ability can be used only three times per battle.
    - While the user is using the swords ability, the user has to put away the handle somewhere for a small moment, or grab it with his/her mouth
    - The user will spend an extra 10 chakra each turn while using the swords ability.
    - The cloud of blade particles move at the speed of the handle that is swung. Ex: If the handle is moved to the left in a slow manner then the cloud will move to the left in a slow manner; if the handle is moved in a fast horizontal slashing motion, then the cloud is moved in a fast horizontal slashing motion.

    this is what the blade looks like



    X-Declined-X Explain or remove the bolded restriction.

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Khallil-Sama~ View Post
    (Kchuysei: Ryōshu Hiro) Summoning: Lord Hiro
    Range: Short-Long
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S

    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user draws blood, performs a few handseals, and he’ll summon the goshawk boss Hiro. Hiro is a goshawk with the size of a big elephant. He is very loyal to it´s master, and speaks english, so we can understand what he says. He can fly very fast, and he has big claws, that are as sharp as knifes. Hiro can only use wind jutsus that are able to be performed with a fan (he uses his wings as fans) or with the mouth (blowing), (the jutsus the user have learned) and he can use ( Futon: Tatsumaki Heki ) - Wind Release: Tordado Wall .He doesn't require handseals for wind jutsus.
    Note:
    -All the wind jutsus he performs with his wings will have +10 damage
    -this Summoning lasts 3 turns
    -this Summoning can only be Summoned by someone with the Goshawk Contract.
    -this Summoning can only be Summoned once per battle.
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    -Declined- Make him only able to use up to S-rank Wind Techniques, and no to that +10 damage points, i got a summon that does the same, and remove that he's able to fly at very fast speed part.


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    (Kichiyose: Ryōshu Hiro) Summoning: Lord Hiro
    Range: Short-Long
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    descirptionThe user draws blood, performs a few handseals, and he’ll summon the goshawk boss Hiro. Hiro is a goshawk with the size of a big elephant. He is very loyal to it´s master, and speaks english, so we can understand what he says. He has big claws, that are as sharp as knifes. Hiro can use wind techniques up to S-rank, but only the wind jutsus that are able to be performed with a fan (he uses his wings as fans) or with the mouth (blowing).( the user has learned). and he can use ( Futon: Tatsumaki Heki ) - Wind Release: Tordado Wall.He doesn't require handseals for wind jutsus.
    Note:
    -this Summoning lasts 3 turns
    -this Summoning can only be Summoned by someone with the Goshawk Contract.
    -this Summoning can only be Summoned once per battle.

    X-Approved-X

    (Mokuton: Tsubasa no nemuke ) - Wood Release: Winged Drowsiness
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B-rank
    Range: Mid - Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user place his dominant hand (with palm up) out in front of him/her. After kneading some chakra, 2 wooden birds will appear from the hand. On the command of the user, they can fly towards the enemy. The user can let one bird flies faster than the other bird. With the user’s will, he can perform a single hand-seal and cause the wooden birds to explode and they release a large amount of pollen in a radius of 5 meters, each releases pollen induces sleep. If the user wants to, he can cause only one bird to explode after performing the handseal, and let the other bird explode on command with another handseal. The birds fail to burst, if struck prematurely with a technique strong against wood release.
    Note:
    ~Can only be taught by ~Khallil-Sama~
    ~The user could also be affected by the pollen
    X-Approved-X Added the bolded part.
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 07-25-2013 at 09:55 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Raiton: Shouheki No Raikou) - Lightning release: Lightning Barrier
    Type: Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60 ( if target comes into contact with the barrier)
    Description:
    The user places his hand on the ground and channels a field of chakra to the ground that appears before him in a form of a huge lightning wall that blocks the enemy's attacks and harm him if he came in contact with it.
    -Can only be taught by megaamine

    (Katon: jouhatsu) - Fire Release: Evaporation
    Type: Offense
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80 ( if target comes into contact with the evaporated area)
    Description:
    After placing his hands on a water source (lake,river..) the user channels a huge amount of Fire chakra that completely evaporates the water source.
    -Can be used once per battle.
    -Can't work in the sea and the ocean.
    -Can only be taught by megaamine.

    X-Both Declined-X Generic techniques
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...69#post4556469

    Dropping if below approved. Due to being a student of Music Arts, I have permission from Roku to submit music based sound jutsu, shown here.

    1. Gifted|Kensai
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: N/A(+10 each turn it is used)
    Damage Points: 80 (for specific jutsus used and created)
    Description: A rather simple invention crafted from indestructible alloys and bonded together using the user's chakra, the custom weapon boasts the power to greatly amplify sound waves. Wielded in a way as not to obstruct the holder from weaving handseals, the "weapon" consists of a pair of Brass Knuckles with a cordless microphone wielded on the outside (the knuckle part) of it. Allowing the user to use sound jutsus through the microphone as a medium, due to the amplification abilities of microphones, this increases the range of them up to one additional range and adds more force and power to them, once more due to the natural amplification properties of microphones. The user is also able to cast vocal based genjutsu through the microphone. A special trait of said microphone, by whistling through it, the user can emit either a high frequency pitched note that causes mental agony and bleeding from the ears (equal to direct exposure to an offensive A rank jutsu). Inversely, the user can emit a low frequency pitch that causes intense vibrations of the skin which vibrate in alternating directions, causing paralysis and moderate pain along the skin of the target (equivalent to an A rank jutsu) if in mid range and the rupturing of several internal organs from direct contact of alternating vibrations (within short range and equivalent to an S rank jutsu in short range due to amplification ability). The paralysis lasts one turn with a sustained loss of balance and impaired motor skills for one addition turn. Either of these abilities can only be used once per fight. Due to the indestructible alloys it is created from, the microphone cannot be destroyed nor sealed. It can also be used for taijutsu means, as a form of an added weapon to the user's hand, increasing taijutsu done with said hand +5 and +10 to sound jutsus performed through the microphone as a medium. The user can only use two sound release jutsu through the microphone a turn. Use of either the high or low frequency ability negates the user from using sound jutsu for two turns afterwards.
    Notes:
    *Cannot be destroyed
    *Sound jutsu used gain an increased power through amplification (+10) and added range (short ranged jutsu go to med range and so on)
    *Usage of the low/high frequency prevents the user from using sound release jutsu for two turns afterwards.
    *Allows user to create specific genjutsu, based upon singing, the utilization of the user's voice and/or sound based upon the vocal cords.
    ||Declined|| You know why, already.

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    Mic is on other side of knuckles, I.e. the left side of the picture in order to be effectively used.


    2. Faded | fe-doauto
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user creates a sound based genjutsu by saying the trigger word Faded, causing sound waves to vibrate amongst the enemy's body from the ground upwards, vibrating heavily and causing a genjutsu to activate that causes the target to feel as if their body is vibrating viciously enough to cause their body to begin to fade away from their legs upwards, as if they are being erased. The genjutsu is further supplemented by causing the enemy to experience pain, while not actually being subjected to physical torture and instead having it be the result of sound waves vibrating amongst the eardrums in the middle ear, which resonate through the liquid filled body and through the three small oscilles that aid in the transmission and amplification of the vibrations in the ear drum. As they become naturally amplified, the sound waves resonate amongst the primary auditory cortex within the brain, causing the sound waves to spread throughout the brain and allow the wave to fool the brain by replicating the feeling of intense pain within the body while not actually aflicting the target, making pain based releases ineffective against it (that's not to say that other releases won't work). The brain sends the signals to the various pain receptors of the body throughout the nervous system, first taking effect at the legs of the target and swiftly making it's way to the head of the target, causing the target to faint from simulated pain of the user's main organs and respiratory system fading away.
    *Can only be used 2 times a fight*
    *Requires a break of at least 2 turns in between usage*
    *After using, the user cannot use Sound for two turns afterwards*
    *Usage of jutsu causes constant pain throughout the target during the duration of the genjutsu, preventing pain based releases*
    *The user can only use either one wind or one lightning jutsu the same turn this is used and can only use a jutsu of the alternating element the following turn.*
    ||Approved||

    3. Sound Release: Imploded Oscillations| Ototon: Fuhatsudan Shindou
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Based on the basic concepts behind the Sound Release: Shattering Vibrations jutsu, the user gathers a rather large amount of both wind and lightning chakra within his hands, albeit a higher concentration than in the aforementioned jutsu. As he gathers the jutsu, the user causes it to match the vibration of an incoming attack and vibrate at the same frequency to counteract it and cause it to disperse in a tremendous explosion with the trajectory of the blast aimed forward, emanating from the point of contact away from the user. This can also be used on an incoming target to similar effect, however unable to cause the enemy ninja to spontaneously combust. It will, however, cause great physical pain from the direct contact with the concentrated vibrations, causing him to receive concussive force damage, strong enough to shatter bones completely if direct contact is sustained. Due to the powerful force of the vibrations, the user is left with small cuts across the arm and the inability to mold chakra through his arms for handseals for jutsu of higher than A rank for one turn and cannot use arm based taijutsu for two turns, including kenjutsu.
    *Can only be used once*
    *Cannot use Sound jutsu in the same turn*
    *requires direct contact with a foe to cause massive damage to them*
    *Cannot use arm based ninjutsu of higher than A rank the next turn and arm based tai/ken for two subsequent turns*
    ||Declined|| Do not Resubmit

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    Last edited by RokuNR; 08-07-2013 at 10:48 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Futon: Kuro-fū) Wind Style: Black Wind
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: An advanced jutsu used by ninjas who were weak in taijutsu. The user uses his mastery over wind, to turn any part of his body or limb into pure air by channelling their chakra to that body part. By concentrating his chakra at that specific body part, the body part would just turn into an intangible version of the original. And when hit, it simply turns into black wind or black smoke. This actually helped them in close combats where they felt they were weak.
    Note:
    - Jutsu lasts only 1 turn, after which the air gets attached to the body and becomes tangible.
    - Can only be used thrice in a battle.
    - Can only be taught by Flash07

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    DNR. Already made.

    (Kōdona nendo) Advanced Clay
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: All (Depending on the jutsu used)
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: N/A (Depends on the jutsu used)
    Damage: N/A (Depends on the jutsu used)
    Description: Deidara carries with him, a modified version of his explosive clay in his pouch. Unlike the normal clay, this clay contains very less water content in it (but enough to mould it properly) which makes it lighter and hence making the clay creatures more faster and more explosive. However, the downside to this is that, the clay creatures that crawl on the ground, create comparatively more noise.
    Note:
    - Speed of clay creatures is x3
    - Explosive power is x3
    - Should be posted before the battle or should be included in the bio.
    - Can only be taught/given by Flash07

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     Declined 
    DNR.

    (Bakuton: Eden no geijutsu no mori) - Explosion Release: The Artistic Forest of Eden
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Deidara first releases a C2 Garuda sized clay figure that can be manipulated into any form and can be used for attack or defence. Once done, with a single handseal, he bursts the clay figure, thereby creating smaller, fist sized clay that get spread out over the entire battlefield. These small clay pieces act as 'seeds', i.e. when Deidara performs another two handseals Ram+Tiger, these 'seeds' suck out energy from the earth or whatever they fall on, to grow into huge trees and thereby end up creating a huge forest in the entire battlefield. Further, by manipulating the chakra in his clay trees, Deidara can manoeuvre it as he sees fit for attack and defence; and furthermore, this omnipotent technique even allows him to capture the enemy at the same time. These trees, being made of explosive clay, can be exploded in parts or entirety according to Deidara's wishes.
    - Can only be used Once per battle.
    - No other Clay technique above A rank in the same or next turn.
    - Can only be taught by Flash07

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     Declined 
    Suck out energy from the ground or wtv? =_= This needs TONS of spelling and description rewording before I can even consider it feasible...
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 08-02-2013 at 04:02 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Ninpou: Puroguramu) | Ninja Style: The Program
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: A technique which essentially allows the user to write a 'program' in which the next used technique(s) will follow. This technique allows the user to create an invisible pathway of chakra, this pathway can essentially follow any route that the user wishes, twisting and turning or looping and curving. The creation of the pathway remains to be rather fast, allowing the next jutsu to be performed as if the two techniques were a cohesive whole. The next performed technique will then essentially follow the built chakra pathway. For instance, should the user utilize this technique to create a curving pathway towards their opponent, and then follow up with a projectile technique such as 'Spear of Darkness', the spear of lightning will instead of going straight towards the opponent, follow the curving pathway so as to flank the opponent from the side. The pathways can affect either a single technique, or multiple techniques, dependent on the users wishes. However it only affects the users, and possibly allies techniques, and has no effects, neither positive nor negative on the opponents jutsu. The pathway could be a simple wire of chakra, which a technique would follow, or a tunnel of chakra, in which a technique would more or less travel inside, perhaps streamlining itself to do so. An advantage of using a more wire like version would be that, the user can alter it's curvature through physical contact. The ends of the wire however remain fixed in place, unless manually moved, and can also be placed or attached to objects through physical contact, allowing techniques released to travel along a wire to 'home' in on said item. While this can still be done with tunnels (to a certain extent), it's generally more taxing or time consuming.

    Note:

    - Can only be used 3x
    - No Ninjutsu above A rank for the rest of the turn.
    - A pathway lasts for three turns, and is invisible to non-doujutsu users.
    - Any technique within reason can travel along a pathway, as long as the technique has been designated to do so. On release, a technique is generally either made to travel alone a pathway, or made to follow it's own independent course. (Techniques such as Moving Earth Core, and Great Stone Golem would naturally be unaffected by a pathway.)
    - The words pathway, tunnel, and wire do not specifically define the shape of the actual pathway, but instead define the manner in which techniques will move along them.
    - Can only be taught by Scaze

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    The concept isn't bad but its a bit too much and it can be easily abused. You need to work on this to make it something that can't be exploited. The way it is you can make any thing you want turn into anything you want. A straightfoward fire stream can even be turned into a mayhem tornado of fire and it can even be used to turn techniques which are otherwise easily counterable into oped moves. I will give you the chance to work on this because of the core idea but honestly...not shaping out to be approvable.

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    Genkotsu Kamakiri: Ofīria o Namiutsu | Mantis Fist: Rippling Ophelia
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: A technique which accentuates on Mantis Fist's element of unpredictability so as to effectively create a form that would make visual prediction and forecasting obsolete. Made possible by making full use of a Mantis Fist users muscle control, their capability to swiftly transition from flexibility to rigidity with ease, and their rather inhumane sense of movement. Unlike most Mantis Fist techniques, this would require a weapon; any weapon, although the longer and more balanced the better. In short, through use of flexibility and movement, the user is capable of rapidly vibrating and undulating their held weapon, making it move in such a manner that it would resemble a rippling snake. Chakra being utilized so as to give a non-forceful augment to the users body while also reverberating throughout the used weapon so as to increase the vibration and undulation speed. The movement essentially creates an optical illusion which bears resemblance to a rippling snake, the illusion makes blocking, dodging and prediction extremely difficult. Prediction of the blades true trajectory would be a practically impossible feat for a Ninja without a doujutsu, as each undulation would be different in both magnitude and speed. Thus dodging with finesse would be virtually impossible, therefore opponents would likely be forced into making large, exceptionally wide dodges that would likely leave them off balance. Lastly, blocking with a similar weapon would also be extensively difficult, as the users weapon would have a habit of 'weaving' through defenses as is befitting of its looks and epithet; rippling snake. This technique can be sped up, slowed down, or even paused according to the users wishes, thus making this technique exceptionally versatile in terms of pace and weapon choice. Lastly, the properties of this technique allows for faster acceleration of a weapon, thus allowing this technique to boast enhanced 'speed' and force.

    Note:
    - Can only be used 2x
    - Once used, this technique lasts for up to three turns.
    - Link to visual representation; http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/__...lingsword4.jpg
    - Using this technique for the entirety of the three turns would mean that there would be a two turn cool-down between uses of the same arm, and the speed of the users movements with said arm would be reduced to 75%.
    - Sharingan of three tomoe and above is capable of reducing the visual ripple, almost nullifying it, thus making dodging and blocking easier.
    - A user below Southern or Northern Praying Mantis rank would have lowered accuracy, while they could aim to strike the enemies torso, where exactly it will strike would be harder to control. Users above the S/N Praying Mantis rank would suffer likewise, albeit for a smaller area such as the upper chest, while Legends or above would have much greater accuracy. The inability to completely control the attacks accuracy further personifies and animalises this technique in conjunction with it's name and epithet. (Based upon opponents of the size of Naruto in p1.)

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     Declined 
    Why is this a mode? And why the vibration part? Ondulating is not vibrating... Its not a move for you CFS but a mode...

    Link to Fuinjutsu training.

    (Fuinjutsu: Tengoku no kuki: Futan) - Sealing Technique: Heavenly Stems: Burden

    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: A technique stemming from exploration of the use of Fuinjutsu alongside weapon use. This technique essentially attempts to expand on the use of Fuinjutsu in weapon play, taking the basic concept of storing weapons within seals for easier and faster access to new heights. Simply put, this technique revolves around utilizing gigantic weapons such as those used by Gamabunta, Gamaken, and Gamahiro, rather than the usual normal sized weapons. These weapons are kept within seals that can be applied to the body or scrolls. However, the true purpose of this technique lies within the fuinjutsu formulas that are riddled across the sealed weapon, two sets of formula, one for weight, and one for size, both intersecting and intertwining while still remaining separate. When these weapons are withdrawn from their storage seals they are essentially completely normal in both size and weight, except for the fuinjutsu that cover their bodies, however by applying chakra the user becomes capable of manipulating the size and/or the weight of said weapons. Manipulation can be done in equal ratios, or in an irregular manner, completely depending on the users preference. Essentially the weapons weight and size is sealed upon itself, with the 'lock' to the seal being undone or reinforced at depths and intensities corresponding to the users wishes, occurring at rather commendable speeds. The implications of this technique allow for weapon play of increased speed or power depending on it's usage. An aesthetics effect of the Fuinjutsu being altered, is that small amounts of a thin translucent black smoke is released, resembling a faint aura if anything due to its scarcity and translucency.

    Note:

    - Requires this technique to be posted in either the users bio, or the presence of this technique to be stated at the beginning of the battle or on an existing weapon.
    - Withdrawing weapons only requires the most basic, miniscule amounts of free-form chakra, however seal size manipulation works in bouts, being activation like in nature. Activating the size and weight sealing formula of a weapon(s) counts as a jutsu, however for the next three turns the weapons size and weight can be manipulated freely.
    - Weapons do not have to be sealed in storage, but can be carried around normally if the user so wishes. All that really counts is if the Fuinjutsu formula is riddled across each of the weapons.
    - In juxtapose to loosening the seal, once the 'key' is in the lock (activation through chakra),the seal can also be tightened, allowing for even smaller weapons.
    - Size changes are quite fast, slightly faster than Akimichi's.
    - Activation can only occur 3x.
    - Can only be taught by Scaze.

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     Declined 
    DNR. Collides with existing things.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 08-02-2013 at 04:09 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Thunderbolt View Post
    Mokushiroku:Apocalypse
    Type:weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Apocalypse is the name given to a sword which rumor had it was forged by one of the sages son himself however that remains unclear and yet to be proven. The sword is 10 meters tall in height and was from titanium and lead and thus is indestructible. The sword though being powerful has its limits and cannot be infused with any elemental chakra. However it has one unique traits which sets it aside from other swords. The swords has its ability to create minor shockwaves blast[A Rank] by the swinging of the sword in a to and Through movement which creates such effects.

    Note:Can only be used /wielded by thunderbolt
    Note:Last for only 4 turns
    Note:Creation of shockwaves count as a move in a turn
    _______________
    -Declined- Still can't approve it, because swords that release shockwaves/blasts..etc are made before a lot, and it can't be approved, also 10 meters is a bit too much, you realize that the longest ninjas are like 2 meters tall right? you will have trouble just swinging that sword around.


    Kaze sutairu: Sobietatsu kazaguruma:Wind Style:Towerful Wind Mill
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points:60
    Description:The user performs The Tiger-Snake and Dog hand seals In quick successions and channels his chakra across his body , using his chakra along with shape manipulation he erects a tall large wind mill up to 50 feet high with huge depth and weight, with two huge blades attached to it which generates a massive amount of wind and can be used to blast anything in its way by generating a great amount of wind in it, the user directs the generated wind towards his opponent which blasts him away out of sight and makes him lose his balance

    1. Can only be used twice in a battle
    2.must be taught by thunderbolt to use
    .
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    -Declined- If it blasts the opponent and make him lose his balance only, then why does it have two blades attached to it? the damage of what your technique does must be clearly described in the description.


    (Genjutsu sutairu: Hikisaka )Illusion Technique:Ripped Apart

    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description:The user performs the rat, dog and tiger hand seals and casts his opponent under a genjutsu Which creates an illusion in which his feet and legs are being tied to two moving horses going in the opposite directions which gradually begins to tear his body muscles and flesh until the force becomes too great that his body is ripped apart completely. This is a mere illusion as in reality the opponent is unharmed and simply disoriented.

    Note:Can only be done Twice in a battle
    Note:must be taught by thunderbolt to use
    _____________
    -Declined- Why is there damage points when the description doesn't mention mental damage? also would the opponent be paralyzed from this? it doesn't feel complex enough to be an A-rank, it's B-rank tops.

    (Genjutsu sutairu: Hikisaka )Illusion Technique:Ripped Apart

    Type: Offense
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra:20
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user performs the rat, dog and tiger hand seals and casts his opponent under a genjutsu Which creates an illusion in which his feet and legs are being tied[Restrained,Not Paralyzed] to two moving horses going in the opposite directions which gradually begins to tear his body muscles and flesh until the force becomes too great that his body is ripped apart completely. This is a mere illusion as in reality the opponent is unharmed and simply disoriented.

    Note:Can only be done three times in a battle
    Note:must be taught by thunderbolt to use

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     Declined 
    Write the description better. Its very weak. Really weak. And disoriented? why?

    Kaze sutairu: Sobietatsu kazaguruma:Wind Style:Towerful Wind Mill
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points:60
    Description:The user performs The Tiger-Snake and Dog hand seals In quick successions and channels his chakra across his body , using his chakra along with shape manipulation he erects a tall large wind mill up to 50 feet high with huge depth and weight, with two huge blades attached to it which generates a massive amount of wind capable of cutting and slicing the opponents body and blowing him away making him lose his balance and footing.

    Can only be used twice in a battle
    must be taught by thunderbolt to use[/B].

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    DNR.



    Quote Originally Posted by Thunderbolt View Post
    Mokushiroku:Apocalypse
    Type:weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Apocalypse is the name given to a sword which rumor had it was forged by one of the sages son himself however that remains unclear and yet to be proven. The sword is 20 meters tall in height and was from titanium and lead and thus is indestructible. The sword though being powerful has its limits and cannot be infused with any elemental chakra. However it has two unique traits which sets it aside from other swords. The sword shares its own unique chakra signature from the user and can knock the user out a genjutsu he is casted upon by creating a chakra surge which he redirects towards the user body, however the genjutsu which can be broken is limited to [A Rank and below] The other ability of the swords is its ability to create minor shockwaves blast[B Rank] by the swinging of the sword in a to and Through movement which creates such effects.

    Note:Can only be used /wielded by thunderbolt
    Note:Last for only 4 turns
    Note:Creation of shockwaves and genjutsu breaking Count as a Move.
    ____________________
    -Declined- No custom weapons that can get you out of genjutsu will be approved anymore.

    Quote Originally Posted by Thunderbolt View Post
    Mokushiroku:Apocalypse
    Type:weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Apocalypse is the name given to a sword which rumor had it was forged by one of the sages son himself however that remains unclear and yet to be proven. The sword is 20 meters tall in height and was from titanium and lead and thus is indestructible. The sword though being powerful has its limits and cannot be infused with any elemental chakra. However it has one unique traits which sets it aside from other swords. The swords has its ability to create minor shockwaves blast[A Rank] by the swinging of the sword in a to and Through movement which creates such effects.

    Note:Can only be used /wielded by thunderbolt
    Note:Last for only 4 turns
    Note:Creation of shockwaves count as a move in a turn

    I removed everything about break genjutsu and reworded more clearly!

    ‡ Declined ‡20 meters long.. and you intend to even pick that up.. how? be realistic with it or dont submit it
    Quote Originally Posted by Thunderbolt View Post
    Mokushiroku:Apocalypse
    Type:weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Apocalypse is the name given to a sword which rumor had it was forged by one of the sages son himself however that remains unclear and yet to be proven. The sword is 10 meters tall in height and was from titanium and lead and thus is indestructible. The sword though being powerful has its limits and cannot be infused with any elemental chakra. However it has one unique traits which sets it aside from other swords. The swords has its ability to create minor shockwaves blast[A Rank] by the swinging of the sword in a to and Through movement which creates such effects.

    Note:Can only be used /wielded by thunderbolt
    Note:Last for only 4 turns
    Note:Creation of shockwaves count as a move in a turn
    _______________
    -Declined- Still can't approve it, because swords that release shockwaves/blasts..etc are made before a lot, and it can't be approved, also 10 meters is a bit too much, you realize that the longest ninjas are like 2 meters tall right? you will have trouble just swinging that sword around.

    Mokushiroku:Apocalypse
    Type:weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Apocalypse is the name given to a sword which rumor had it was forged by one of the sages son himself however that remains unclear and yet to be proven. The sword is4 meters tall in height and was from titanium and lead and thus is indestructible. [B]The sword though being powerful has its limits and cannot be infused with any elemental chakra. However it has one unique traits which sets it aside from other swords. The swords has its ability To repel incoming projectiles such as kunai, shiruken etc along with other Elemental Jutsu attacks [A rank and Below]

    Note:Can only be used /wielded by thunderbolt
    Note:Last for only 4 turns

    I changed its length to 4 meters and removed the "shock waves" part and came up with the new idea, the previous submission r in spoilers. Ive done everything vincent and dante said, ive made all the changes they asked.

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    DNR. Breaking the blue rule again will earn you a ban from this thread...and not a small one. Btw, this weapon is not worthy of being approved as a CW. Nothing special or noteworthy about it at all and tbh, "lasts 4 turns"? I mean, sorry but you need before you try and submit a CW again to actually understand what a CW is. And spoilers are only for images and videos, nothing else.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Permission from -Andy- to resubmit Water Ion Particle Armor
    Link to approval of technique

    Water style:Water Particle Armor-水スタイル:水粒子アーマー
    Rank:A
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Range:short
    Type: Defencive
    Description:lastas for 3 turns and can be used only 3 times per battle this jutsu makes a layer of water particles in the surfess of the body that is able to deflect any Water,Fire,Wind elemental attacks up to C rank the chakra will be taken fron that jutsu and be added to andys next jutsu with any of his jutsus that he uses goes up by 1 rank the armor lasts for 3 turns
    (Suiton: Suiton aian ryuushi) Water Style: Water Ion Particle
    Type: Defense/Supplamentary
    Rank:Forbidden
    Range: Self
    Chakra:45 (-10 Every Turn Its Active)
    Damage:N/a (-30 Due to fatigue after it ends)
    Description:This jutsu makes a layer of water particles on the surface of the body by causing water in the body and mixing it with water chakra to surface to the skin of the body,that is able to deflect/and absorb any chakra base (Excluding Lightning Base Jutsus, and Earth Base Jutsus) attacks up to B rank and Fire Jutsus up to A rank.. This Water armor is special, as it does not act as a mere defensive armor but as an absorbing armor. As the jutsu hit the armor, the Armor will absorb the chakra from the chakra jutsus and It gives the user +15 added to the users next jutsu. This jutsu is very special and is a risk because the user channels their water chakra to cause the water in the user body to rise to the surface to mix (Their water chakra and their bodly water) Thus causing the user to dehydrate a little causing fatigue.
    -Note: Armor Last for 4 turns
    -Note: Spite elemental weakness, this armor does not protect against S rank and above fire
    -Note: The user suffers slight fatigue once the armor is deactivated, not allowing the user to use Water jutsus for 3 turns
    -Note: Cant mold water chakra above S rank for the rest of the battle
    -Note: Only able to do the jutsu once

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    You cannot submit other people's techniques regardless of permissions or anything else.

    (Fuuton:hitobito tatsumaki) Wind Style: Human Tornado
    Type: Attack/Defensive/
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The User Will gather large amounts of wind chakra into their feet, Once Done, They will do a set of 3 handseals, Causing Wind to circulate from around the users feet forming a Tornado. This Tornado Will Reach up to Mid Range. Once The Tornado Reached Mid-Range In Height, The User will Do 1 handseal causing the tornado to sent an outburst of wind from the tornado. The outburst of the wind are extremely sharp, Allowing it to cut through A Rank Earth With Ease. The Powerful Thing About this Jutsu is that, Instead of blowing the opponents backwards, This tornado acts as a suction, Sucking everything in it within short range Radius.

    Note: This Jutsu Last can only last for a max of 15seconds
    Note: The user is not able to Use Wind Jutsus above A rank for the next two turns
    Note: The User Is only allowed to use one Other Jutsu Along With this one in the same turn
    Note: Cant use any jutsu While this jutsu is in affect
    Note: Can only Use Once


    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    Similar to at least 3 wind techniques already made. Besides, you'd be killed by basically any S-rank Fire shot at you when you activate it. Think about it: it sucks anything into it, it surrounds you, its wind... >_> DNR.

    (Genjutsu :Ranpu kibou) Illusionary Arts: Light Trickery
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/a
    Description: This is a special type of genjutsu as it requires a holster with a sword in it. The User will slowly pull out their sword from their holster in their opponents line of sight, thus inducing the opponent in the genjutsu. As the sword is being drawn out, the opponent will see a very bright blinding light coming from the sword as its coming out the sword holster, temporarily blinding the opponent for, As the opponent is blind, the user will feel a sharp stab through their chest from the back. As the opponent gets stabbed from the back the blinding light will go down, and the opponent will then not see the user in front of them but in the back. Making it seem like the user is the one that stabbed them from the back. In reality the opponent simply falls to the ground from shock once stabbed in the genjutsu. Thus giving the user a chance to attack.

    Note: Can Use Twice
    Note: Cant Use A Rank Gen or above the next turn after use
    Note: Must carry a holster with a sword in it

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    Needs a trigger in the form of Handdseals or some gesture like the confrontation handseal as you take the sword from the holster. Besides, its at best a B-Rank genjutsu. Also you wrote that the user is stabbed from the back...might wanna reword that unless you want to damage yourself with your own genjutsu...>_>
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Magen: Hanpatsu Baki - Demonic Illusion:
    Rebounding Curse

    Type: Sup
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A(Depends on the opponent's
    illusion)
    Description: A genjutsu cast on an opponent that lays dormant until the opponent is about to cast a genjutsu of his own. This genjutsu simply makes the opponent to be effected by his own genjutsu. The user channels and blends his chakra into an opponent's chakra network which lays dormant till the moment the opponent casts his/her own genjutsu at which point it triggers the user's own genjutsu. The genjutsu simply instantly duplicates the opponent's genjutsu upon himself, however this also severes the genjutsu that is casted on the user before it takes full effect(apparently breaking him out of it since the opponent which would now be bothered by his own genjutsu, won't have the time and chakra control to actually complete his genjutsu on the user) making it look like the opponent is actually casting his own genjutsu on himself. The dormant chakra can't be detected by sensory making this genjutsu a foul and decieving one.
    Works on genjutsu upto A-rank.
    +Useable only 3 times
    +Lays dormant until it is trigered by the opponent's genjutsu and the dormant chakra can't be detected by sensory
    +Must be taught by Priest
    +Can't be used on Sharingan genjutsu

    X-Declined-X Then Next Question: Why cant the dormant chakra be detected?

    Pitohui Kuchyose: Kullios - Pitohui Summoning: Kullios
    Rank: B
    Type: Sup
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user smears blood on their palm, makes the neccesary handseals then
    presses their palm on the ground or clap both hands together to summon Kullios in a cloud of white smoke.
    Kullios is a small Hooded Pitohui with the size of a dog. He wears a blue armor on its back and a Kirigakure headband tied around it neck showing their loyalty to the village. However he is but with very large and light feathers even he himself is a very rare one among his species being enourmously lightweighted which naturally grants him immense speed. He can communicate with his summoner through Pitohuian Language.
    Abilities:
    -Kulius can't use any Ninjutsu except for Pitohui arts.
    -Has immense flying speed not the same but almost equivalent to Lee's
    without his wieght and trackable by doujutsus
    and though normal eyes are still able to track it but would have difficulty reacting to it with the exception of Taijutsu specialist which can easily react to it instinctively.
    -He can sense and identify body heat signatures which makes him able to differentiate human and animal species
    -He also has some amount of neurotoxins though not enough to kill but can cause paralysis
    -He can't be ridden as he's small and very light but can perch on its summoner's head without any stress/load on the summoner
    Note:
    -Paralysis from his neurotoxin only lasts for 2turns
    -Can be summoned once and lasts on the field for 5 turns
    -Summoning must be taught by Priest
    Hooded Pitohui Approval

    X-Declined-X How can it sense heat? And that speed is example is no good. The speed of rock lee himself is questionable, we dont even know for sure, he might match the speed of Minato in the next chapter for all i know.

    Pitohui Geijutsu: Kagai Doukisaki - Pitohui Arts: Foul body of Pitohuian Empress
    Rank: A
    Type: Sup
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: A hooded pitohui or someone who has signed the contract and who is trained in the training mangroves of modakeke by Majele herself. They become one with their foul naturewhile using nature manipulation to transform their body on a cellular level where they are able to tranform their body into a Purple cloud/gas of neurotoxin thus they are intangible to physical attacks. If an opponent is caught in within, he would undergo local paralysis where he can not move his entire body for 2 secs. Also transforming back to physical body is extremely fast and barely noticeable, however except the Empress herself who can move upto Mid-range in her intangible form within split seconds, any other hooded pitohui and summoner can only move short range in this form.
    ++Note++
    -Useable 3 times per match
    -One turn rest inbetween useage
    -Can only be used by Hooded Pitohuis and their summoner
    -Must be taught by Priest
    Hooded Pitohui Approval

    X-Declined-X Again How? Are you under the impression that it is that simple to turn yourself into anything else? Elements are easy because they are Chakra Natures. A Neurotoxin is nerve poison...
    Magen: Hanpatsu Baki - Demonic Illusion:
    Rebounding Curse

    Type: Sup
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A(Depends on the opponent's
    illusion)
    Description: A genjutsu cast on an opponent that lays dormant until the opponent is about to cast a genjutsu of his own. This genjutsu simply makes the opponent to be effected by his own genjutsu. The user channels and blends his chakra into an opponent's chakra network which lays dormant till the moment the opponent casts his/her own genjutsu at which point it triggers the user's own genjutsu. The genjutsu simply instantly duplicates the opponent's genjutsu upon himself, however this also severes the genjutsu that is casted on the user before it takes full effect(apparently breaking him out of it since the opponent which would now be bothered by his own genjutsu, won't have the time and chakra control to actually complete his genjutsu on the user) making it look like the opponent is actually casting his own genjutsu on himself. The dormant chakra is nearly undetectable by sensory, following the new rules of genjutsu that chakra used for genjutsu can't be actually seen when casted as genjutsu would actually be useless if that is possible, and the chakra is actually made to blend with the opponent's chakra just like blending with surrounding light to become invisible and it would even take a sensor to take note of minor details to be able to distinguish the foreign chakra from his, making this genjutsu a foul and decieving one.
    Works on genjutsu upto A-rank.
    +Useable only 3 times
    +Lays dormant until it is trigered by the opponent's genjutsu and the dormant chakra can be detected by sensory, however, its logical that they won't know when the genjutsu chakra is entering their system, sensing is faint but they can easily realize and be assured of the presence of foreign chakra at the time the genjutsu is about to take effect
    +Must be taught by Priest
    +Can't be used on Sharingan genjutsu

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    DNR. Concept itself is not feasible...

    Pitohui Kuchyose: Kullios - Pitohui Summoning: Kullios
    Rank: B
    Type: Sup
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user smears blood on their palm, makes the neccesary handseals then
    presses their palm on the ground or clap both hands together to summon Kullios in a cloud of white smoke.
    Kullios is a small Hooded Pitohui with the size of a dog. He wears a blue armor on its back and a Kirigakure headband tied around it neck showing their loyalty to the village. However he is but with very large and light feathers even he himself is a very rare one among his species being enourmously lightweighted which naturally grants him immense speed. He can communicate with his summoner through Pitohuian Language.
    Abilities:
    -Kulius can't use any Ninjutsu except for Pitohui arts.
    -Has immense flying speed equivalent to a Sage's speed.
    -He constantly secretes from all his pores, transparent harmless and unflammable toxin gas which while merging his spirit with it, he becomes one with the surrounding containing the gas thus can sense heat within it and so can detect and identify body heat signatures within the range of the gas(can spread up to 100m max)
    -He also has some amount of neurotoxins though not enough to kill but can cause paralysis
    -He can't be ridden as he's small and very light but can perch on its summoner's head without any stress/load on the summoner
    Note:
    -Paralysis from his neurotoxin only lasts for 2turns
    -Can be summoned once and lasts on the field for 5 turns
    -Summoning must be taught by Priest
    Hooded Pitohui Approval

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    Merging his spirit? A harmless substance which is yet called "toxin" for some reason? Yeah...No. DNR. And don't take the minor toxin approved in your contract too far... Its borderlining medical grade poison in your submissions.

    Pitohui Geijutsu: Kagai Doukisaki - Pitohui Arts: Foul body of Pitohuian Empress
    Rank: A
    Type: Sup
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: A hooded pitohui or someone who has signed the contract and who is trained in the training mangroves of modakeke by Majele herself. They become one with their foul naturewhile using nature manipulation to transform their body on a cellular level where they are able to tranform their body into a Purple cloud/gas of neurotoxin thus they are intangible to physical attacks. This somewhat and simply follows the principle of "Assimilation of all creation technique" and since their natural affinity is toxin gas, they are able to change their nature and self completely down to cellular level into gas. This also applies to the summoner who instead of having toxins as their natural affinity, they had undergone training to be able to become one with the Hooded Pitohuis and thus able to transform their body too. If an opponent is caught in within, he would undergo local paralysis where he can not move his entire body for 2 secs. Also transforming back to physical body is extremely fast and barely noticeable, however except the Empress herself who can move upto Mid-range in her intangible form within split seconds, any other hooded pitohui and summoner can only move short range in this form.
    ++Note++
    -Useable 3 times per match
    -One turn rest inbetween useage
    -Can only be used by Hooded Pitohuis and their summoner
    -Must be taught by Priest
    Hooded Pitohui Approval

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    DNR.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    [Suiton: Rippou Fuzen] - Water Style: Cube of Mischief
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: This technique can only be used when the target is standing on water. The user will first wave 1 hand-seal. Doing so, will focus chakra into the water below the opponent, then the water opens up in a square shaped box below the target, making them fall in. Afterwards the user if wanted may wave 1 more handseal and cause the sides of the cube to close in on each other with tremendous strength, violently crushing the victim to a bone-breaking degree due to the pressure of the water. This technique is very versatile, for it can be as wide and as deep as the user wants, within narutoverse logic and reason; to fit the entire body or just a part, meaning the user can open it only wide enough to make 1 of the opponent's foot fall in and then crush it [ if wanted ]. This can be done wide enough to make 5 bodies lined up fall inside, and as deep as 10 meters, however, the larger the space, the more it takes to close in. Nevertheless the process in which it opens and shuts is rather fast. It can be shut just enough to prevent foot or body movement, not crushing the trapped body [part].
    - May only be used x3 per battle.

    ________________________________________________
     Approved 


    [Fuuton/Doton: Boukyaku Takeda] - Wind/Earth Style: Ferocious Oblivion
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: A dual working technique, using both the properties of wind as the ones of Earth. The user first does a single hand-seal and stomping the ground with a firm step. Creating an underground tunnel towards the area below the opponent, at the same time also raising a 10 meter tall and thick hollow cylinder of earth around the opponent. Then stomping the ground yet again, this time sending wind based chakra, following the cylinder, massive waves of slicing wind envelop the target from below, slashing their body and violently blowing it out of the cylinder rained in wounds. The stomps on the ground can be done in quick succession, making it appear as if the wind follows the cylinder's creation, i matter of seconds.
    - No Earth or Wind techniques A ranked technique can be used in the next turn.
    - May only be used x2 per battle, but not in consecutive turns.

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    Should count as 2 techniques, should require at least 2 handseals for the wind part.

    [Fuuton: Airagon] - Wind Style: Blue Dragon
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: This can only be done if the user is near the opponent. First clapping their hands together while retreating them backwards, focusing precise and compressed wind chakra, creating a temporary visible wind orb - Then, by opening both palms widely, one above, and the other one below to their knee region, with both palms facing the opponent; The wind is released in form of nearly invisible to the naked eyed small slices of wind, which will slice the opponents body countless times, since the blades of wind released are many. These blades of wind cannot pierce further than the skin, causing only skin cuts, but due to amount of cuts dealt, not to mention the blood loss from each cut, makes this technique fearsome, and not to be underestimated. Also, due to how the hands of the user released the wind, the small wind blades are aimed at the opponent's head to their feet. Making it a widespread technique.
    - May only be used x3 per battle.

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    remove the near invisibility part.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±


    Yoshimitsu
    Rank: A
    Type: Puppet
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: - (30 to summon)
    Damage Points: -
    Description:
    → Yoshimitsu is a puppet created long ago by Alternative which has had many tweaks to it to make it a viable puppet. He takes on the form of a Samurai, though can't use Samurai techniques. It is primarily made of a sturdy wood, with pieces of refined metal across it's face, ribs and legs to imitate a skeletal look. It is slightly taller than the average human, standing tall at approx. 2m and seems to have an athletic build. It's left wrist is mechanical, being able to twirl it around in haste. In it's left hand it wields a katana which is his primary weapon used for attacking. The user is able to use Kenjutsu techniques through the puppet, so long as the user has gone through the required training for it. The katana is also said to be cursed. Yoshimitsu's sword isn't seeped in poison, because it's based on a samurai from ancient folklore, which doesn't believe in using such toxins in such a way. Yoshimitsu is also able to use all basic puppet techniques, including Senbon Rain from it's right hand (fingertips), creating a Chakra shield using it's right arm, and able to emit either poison smoke or poison capsules which emit gas on hitting the floor through a compartment in it's mouth.
    Notes:
    → Yoshimitsu cannot be summoned into battle without proper Fuuinjutsu training
    → While wielding the katana, the puppet cannot use any standard puppet jutsu
    → Kenjutsu moves used through the puppet count as a move
    → Can only use Kenjutsu techniques up to A-Rank
    → Can only be used by those allowed by Alternative

    Looks like this:


    ~Approved~


    (Harakiri) - Disembowelment
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    → Once Yoshimitsu draws close to the opponent, with great speed, it turns backwards and stabs the opponent through itself. Through stabbing itself in this way, Yoshimitsu hits a poison gland built into the puppet, intoxicating the opponent upon puncturing them.
    Notes:
    → Must know Puppet Jutsu
    → Can only be used by a Yoshimitsu puppet
    → Because of the effect, this can only be used once a battle
    → After usage, poison cannot be used throughout it's weapons for the remainder of the match
    → The puppet is left extremely weakened after this, only to be allowed to use B-Rank and lower puppet jutsu
    → Can only be used by those Alternative allows



    Feel free to edit however you wish. ^^

    ~Approved~ I can't remember the last time I approved 3 out of 3 submissions. Congrats ^^

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    Can't directly quote, http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...04#post5178104

    Yoshimitsu
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: - (+20 to summon)
    Damage Points: -
    Description: Yoshimitsu is a puppet which resembles that of a skeletal samurai. It's build is made primarily of wood, reinforced with metal plates across it's face and body to achieve this result. It wields a standard, detachable katana with it's scabbard on it's right side, making Yoshimitsu left-handed by design. Because of the design, the puppet holds the capability of performing all Taijutsu and Kenjutsu which the user knows (non-chakra based).
    The puppet's left arm is completely mechanical, and is used for the majority of the puppet techniques. It holds a rotary design which allows for a multitude of abilities to be used, and capable of spinning it's entire arm from the elbow joint at incredibly fast speeds in a clockwise manner. It's right arm is moreso used for "Chakra Shield" and other such techniques. The puppet is capable of releasing a poisonous mist from it's mouth which reaches short-range of it as a substitute for "Poison Smokebomb". Similarly done to Crow, all of it's body is detachable and can be used in similar fashions as it, without spikes emerging from the joints. The signature technique of Yoshimitsu is a seppuku-like action which cuts into the puppet and further through to the target. There's a small slot on it's stomach region used specifically for this technique, along with a small poisonous sack which it bursts upon using it.
    Yoshimitsu can either be stored in a scroll or carried on the user's back wrapped in loin cloth before entering battle. If carried on his back, the user can bring the puppet out without a chakra cost and without it counting towards the limit of techniques used per turn.




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    Rewrote the entire description, there isn't a japanese/english translation.

    [Harakiri] ; Disembowelment
    Rank: C
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: -
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: Once Yoshimitsu draws close to the opponent, it stabs itself in a Seppuku-like fashion with it's blade. It pierces through a small slot with a poisonous gland which it punctures upon impact, poisoning the target on hit. The poisonous affect occurs only once, and renders the poison used in "Endless Rain of Senbon" moot.

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    I don't understand it. It stabs itself in a gland? Its a puppet, so shouldn't it be a poison bag or something? Then how does poison the target? Do you mean that it poisons the katana and then it will poison the target if it hits it afterwards? Contact me.

    [Dansei Bondēji] ; Elastic Bondage
    Rank: -
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: -
    Chakra Cost: -
    Damage Points: -
    Description: This is a special type of build in selected puppets, where rubber is installed into the joints of them to give them a more flexible, elastic consistency to the build. Because of the properties of the rubber, it allows the puppets' reach in joints to extend a further five meters for longer ranged attacks, which retract instantly. The puppet is generally affected by the nature of rubber and how it works with the elements with this build, meaning if something happens to the puppet which causes it to become stale, the elastic bondage can potentially break down and become useless. This technique must be specified at the beginning of the battle as to which puppets it affects. The puppet can't drastically detach the body for techniques where possible.

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    Contact me. I need to know exactly what this will translate into in battle.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Katon: Uragiri kasai) - Fire release: Betraying fire
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user manipulates a portion or the entirety of an already existing fire, draining from its power making it form, shape and move as the user wants. The power of the fire manipulated is drained from the already existing fire, this means that if the already existing fire is of S-rank then using this technique would lower the already existing fire to become of C-rank power. If the already existing fire is of B-rank then the user basically manipulates all of it. The already existing fire must be of a distance of up to mid range from the user, however, the manipulated fire can only move to short range from its original source. This means that the manipulated fire can reach up to to long range from the user.

    Note: The already existing fire cannot be C-rank or below
    Note: Only usable twice per battle
    Note: Must be taught by -Tsuki

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    DNR.

    (Jishuteki kage) - Independent shadow
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user performs the rat handseal then separates their own shadow from themselves which allows the shadow to no longer be linked to the user’s body. The shadow keeps a humanoid form and the user manipulates the shadow to move around the terrain for their own advantage. During the process of manipulating it, it will be up to the user weather the shadow will have shape (using shape manipulation on it so that it becomes physical) or keep it in the form of a non-shaped shadow. When having shape it can also use freeform.
    Because of the user being separated from their own shadow, they will not be capable of using any shadow technique that requires them to extend their own shadow. They will still be capable of using techniques such as Shadow Imitation Shuriken because it does not rely on extending the user’s shadow. While the shadow is separated from the user’s body, it can use shadow techniques that requires it to extend its own shadow such as Shadow Imitation.
    When the user does not have his shadow attached to him then no shadow binding techniques can be used against him because he doesn’t have any shadow (bound to him). This jutsu ends when the independent shadow uses 3 shadow techniques, when it gets defeated or if the user simply decides to return it back to himself. It will then get back to the user as it should be (= as a normal shadow anyone has).

    Note: Lasts for up to 3 turns (with the conditions in the jutsu description included)
    Note: Techniques used by the independent shadow counts as a move to the user
    Note: Only usable once per fight
    Note: Must be taught by -Tsuki

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    link to Nara clan bio and training?

    (Futon no joryoku) - Wind Release of assistance
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: C-rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: Creates minor shields of condensed wind chakra and small tools made by using condensed wind chakra. If they are made to be stationary and non-movable from their place in the air then they must only be at short range from the user. This technique is similar to Suton no Jutsu and Doton no Jutsu but with wind. Things made by this technique will be possible to see with normal eyes but will require the person focus more when looking at them

    Note: Usable once every second turn
    Note: Must be taught by -Tsuki

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    DNR. Made already
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Emerarudo Hebi) - Emerald Serpent
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40 (-10 per turn)
    Damage: 80
    Description: Emerald Serpent is a katana with it's hilt covered in green leather and decorated with diamond-shaped gold. It was created using the material, Wurtzite Boron Nitride which is the hardest mineral on Earth. Originally created and wielded by the Sage of The Six Path's Elder Son during his battle with his brother, the sword has been passed down the Uchiha Clan for centuries. The sword is fueled by hatred and it's thirst for blood is what attracts everyone towards it. Most of it's wielders died during battle as they were rejected by the sword who seeked a stronger wielder. During Uchiha Clan's battle with the Senju Clan, the sword fell into a river and disappeared. To this day the Sword seeks a person strong enough to wield the sword


    Abilities
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    The Sword is near indestructible as it created by the most hardest mineral on Earth. However, the power within the sword comes from it's wielders hatred and blood lust. In other words, the sword feeds on its wielders emotions


    2. The sword is able to produce poison from it's katana, [Once Every Two Turns]. This poison when enters the targets body starts to destroy it's cells and slowly kills them. The sword absorbs the targets blood and produces a new poison during every battle. This is to prevent the target being immune to the poison as they would naturally produce antibodies. The target however can cut off that certain part of their body in the first or second turn to prevent the poison from spreading any further and basically completely get rid of the poison in their body. In the 3rd turn however it would be impossible to get rid of that certain part and expect to live


    On the 1st turn, the target will feel a burning sensation on the spot where they were cut. Damage Inflicted: 10 + Burning Sensation
    On the 2nd turn, the poison will start to attack and destroy the nearby cells. Damage Inflicted: 20 + Swelling and Burning Sensation
    On the 3rd turn, the poison will start to spread throughout the body killing any cells in its way. Damage Inflicted: 30 + Extreme Pain
    On the 4th turn, the poison will destroy 1/3 of the target's cells. Damage Inflicted: 40 + Target Barely Able To Move
    On the 5th turn, the poison will destroy 2/3 of the target's cells. Damage Inflicted: 50 + Target Immobilized
    On the 6th turn, the poison will destroy all of the target's cells. Damage Inflicted: 60 + Death Of Target

    The cells in the black area have been destroyed




    3. The sword is able to see and hear however it cannot speak. The sword is able to communicate with it's wielder telepathically, however this will only happen if the wielder is wielding the sword at that time


    4. In case the sword is picked up by someone whom it does not desires to be controlled by, the sword is able to feed on it's wielders emotions. Although at first the wielder might not find any problem at controlling the sword, they soon would be filled with blood lust, anger and hatred towards everyone and would soon literally go crazy.


    On the 1st turn, the wielder will have no problem in controlling the sword
    On the 2nd turn, the wielder have his emotions sucked out by the sword. His mind would be filled with hatred and anger and would recklessly attack anyone within their sight not caring about their life or getting injured
    On the 3rd time, the wielder would feel extremely tired and lonely. Their eyes would be filled in tears and their heart filled with regret



    Restrictions
    1.
    If the sword shows no interest in it's wielder, that person can only wield the sword for 3 turns. [Check Ability 4]
    2. Only Hell Autarch and those he allow can wield the sword.
    3. The user must not forget that the sword feeds on their emotions as well. This means that even the user cannot wield the sword forever, without expecting any side effects
    4. Using the sword or one of it's abilities counts towards the 3 Move Limit. Ability Number #1 and #4 however do not count towards the limit








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    Didn't know you had mastered Medical Jutsu and was able to use Poison related techniques.... DNR.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Frozenstein View Post
    3d Maneuver Gear
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary (Weapon)
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The 3d Maneuver Gear is a rather weird weapon set. It contains several parts with different purposes, which can be used individually, but mostly effective if used together. Like with other weapons, the most important part is the blade (swords). This blade however is very different from the others. The hilt is connected to the gear with a long wire, while the blade itself is detachable and replaceable with a new one. The blade’s length is of a normal katana’s, but wider and straight. This blade can be detached with a swinging motion, allowing the user to „throw” it toward his opponent. There are 2 swords in total what are stored in special sheaths. These sheaths are made from metal and can store the 2 swords and 5-5 additional blades in total. On the sheaths, there are small „devices” that launches a hook with a wire attached to them. There is only 1 hook on each sheath and only 1 device, whats purpose is to launch the hook in a desired direction and once it pierces something, the user can pull himself toward it. This device is similar to Sasori’s launcher and totally controlled by the user’s chakra. It can also be pulled back easily. The last part is a simple roundish blowhole which is on the user’s waist behind him. It has only one purpose, to release the user’s wind chakra and propel the user forward. This part can be used with the hooks, to increase the speed and/or change directions in mid air. The whole device is connected to a metal belt and is indestructible. This gear can be used to perform elemental/non elemental or kenjutsu techniques. The user can also channel his lightning chakra through the hooks to shock his opponent.
    - every „device” the gear has is controlled by the user’s chakra and not more complicated than a puppeteer’s puppet
    - using the hooks doesn’t count as a move, but can be used with the blowhole
    - using the blowhole counts as 1 move and equals a B-ranked move (20 chakra, 0 damage)
    - channeling lightning chakra through the wires and hooks counts as an A-ranked move (30 chakra, 60 damage)
    - can only be used by Frozenstein
    How the set looks like:

    How it can be used in combat:

    Dropping this weapon if approved
    ________________
    -Declined- a CW can't contain a "device", it's technology related, and CW cannot contain advanced technology, they are simple hammer, chains, swords etc, the only exception to this is Nagato's Asura path abilities, not to mention, increasing your speed won't be approved, and changing directions in the mid air can happen through the usage of Wind Stream Technique.


    (Katon: Honoo Maisou) - Fire Release: Flame Burial
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: A last resort technique designed to incinerate the user's body and prevent the opponent from getting valuable DNA or any secrets from his body. To use this technique, the user changes all of his remaining chakra into fire chakra and with his last command, turns it into fire inside his own body and make it explode. Since the user uses all of his chakra what is divided equally in him, this explosion will look like a spontaneous combustion and instead of scattering the user's body, it will eradicate it completely in a mere of few seconds, leaving nothing behind but the burnt ground and smaller/bigger fires in the vicinity. It shows the strength of the technique that everything in a 5 meters radius (short range) is being incinerated in the flames, killing anyone that comes too close. Objects and living organisms in a 15 meters radius (mid range) are being ignited or get severe burns to the point there's no intact place on their body and they suffer extreme pain as well as die if they don't get treatment. Targets at long range will only feel a hot breeze of air. Since the combustion happens really fast as well as the explosion (1.2x faster than a lightning attack), the closer the opponent is, the harder it is to evade the technique.
    - can only be used once per battle
    - can be used by a clone, but the user won't receive it's chakra back
    - if used by a clone, the user can get caught in the explosion too
    - can only be taught by Frozenstein
    ________________
    -Declined- A bit OP, and it's very similar to the Reverse Four Symbols Sealing Technique, only with fire instead.
    3d Maneuver Gear
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary (Weapon)
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The 3d Maneuver Gear is a rather weird weapon set. It contains several parts with different purposes, which can be used individually, but mostly effective if used together. Like with other weapons, the most important part is the blade (swords). This blade however is very different from the others. The hilt is connected to the gear with a long wire, while the blade itself is detachable and replaceable with a new one. The blade’s length is of a normal katana’s, but wider and straight. This blade can be detached with a swinging motion, allowing the user to „throw” it toward his opponent. There are 2 swords in total what are stored in special sheaths. These sheaths are made from metal and can store the 2 swords and 5-5 additional blades in total. On the sheaths, there are small tubes that have a hook in them and a reel that have a long wire on it. The wires are attached to the hooks, what can be launched at the targeted area using chakra. If the hook pierces a solid surface or something similar, the user can pull himself toward that area by reeling the wire back with chakra. There is only 1 hook and reel on each sheath. The last part is a simple roundish blowhole which is on the user’s waist behind him. It has only one purpose, to release the user’s wind chakra and propel the user forward. This part can be used with the hooks, to make it easier for the user to pull himself in the desired area or change directions in mid air. The whole set is connected to a metal belt and is indestructible. This gear can be used to perform elemental/non elemental or kenjutsu techniques. The user can also channel his lightning chakra through the hooks to shock his opponent.
    - using the hooks doesn’t count as a move, but can be used with the blowhole
    - using the blowhole counts as 1 move and equals a B-ranked move (20 chakra, 0 damage)
    - channeling lightning chakra through the wires and hooks counts as an A-ranked move (30 chakra, 60 damage)
    - can only be used by Frozenstein
    How the set looks like:

    How it can be used in combat:

    Dropping this weapon if approved

    Deleted some parts and re-wrote another bunch. The blowhole is a part of the original weapon I made it from, and is necessary for the maneuvering.

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     Pending 
    Leaving to someone else. I personally don't like it and I'm not seeing how you'll be able to fight with this in our RP (description and such) thus I prefer if someone else checks it.
    __________
    -Declined- DNR, it's going to mess things up in the battle, sorry, but can't find this working.


    (Katon: Honoo Maisou) - Fire Release: Flame Burial
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: A last resort technique designed to incinerate the user's body and prevent the opponent from getting valuable DNA or any secrets from his body. If the user thinks he can't win the fight or he have to dispose of everything that could be used against his allies, with a simple command of his, he turns all of his remaining chakra into fire chakra inside his own body and make it explode. Since the user uses all of his chakra what is divided equally in him, this explosion will look like a spontaneous combustion and instead of scattering the user's body, it will eradicate it completely in a mere of few seconds, leaving nothing behind but the burnt ground and smaller/bigger fires in the vicinity. It shows the strength of the technique that everything in a 5 meters radius (short range) is being incinerated in the flames, killing anyone that comes too close. Objects and living organisms in a 15 meters radius (mid range) are being ignited and get severe burns to the point there's almost no intact place on their body. They suffer extreme pain like they were hit by a S-rank fire attack. Targets at long range will only feel a hot breeze of air. The technique needs a 3 seconds charging time to turn all of the chakra into fire, but combustion happens really fast as well as the explosion (1.2x faster than a lightning attack), the closer the opponent is, the harder it is to evade the technique.
    - can only be used once per battle
    - changing all the chakra into fire is an automatic process and can't be reversed
    - targets in a mid range radius (5-15 meters) suffer S-rank damage instead of F-rank

    - can be used by a clone, but the user won't receive it's chakra back
    - if used by a clone, the user can get caught in the explosion too
    - can only be taught by Frozenstein

    Changed some parts and tried to make it less OP.

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    Omni fire blast? Done before. Self imulation? No. But for this to be approved, the omniblast part needs to go for good.

    Quote Originally Posted by Frozenstein View Post
    (Fuuton: Joumae Seki Reikon Setsudanki) - Wind Release: Locked Gate Soul Cutter
    Type: Attack, Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short-Mid (The effect range of this technique is 5m)
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: User crosses his arms or get a similar position and gather wind in the targeted area. Then by swinging his arms he makes the wind spiraling inward with great speed and force. The wind makes deep cuts in the opponent and makes him twist in the direction the wind moves. However the main purpose of this tech is that it can „grab” the opponent or it’s body parts like arm, leg, head and twist it with great force, breaking/dislocating it and rendering it useless. The tech can only be used on body parts that are „pointing” toward him, like when the opponent is punching or kicking or just pointing at the user. Otherwise it would only make the cuts. Same goes for the head too. The maximum size of the tech is 3 meters in diameter, but can freely change it while it's smaller that that.
    - can only be used 4 times per battle
    - can only be taught by Frozenstein

    How the technique works and basic position looks like:


    X-Approved-X Added a range within which the technique can be performed. Mid range is a vague term
    (Fuuton: Joumae Seki Reikon Setsudanki) - Wind Release: Locked Gate Soul Cutter
    Type: Attack, Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: User crosses his arms or get a similar position and gather wind in the targeted area. Then by swinging his arms he makes the wind spiraling inward with great speed and force. The wind makes deep cuts in the opponent and makes him twist in the direction the wind moves. However the main purpose of this tech is that it can „grab” the opponent or it’s body parts like arm, leg, head and twist it with great force, breaking/dislocating it and rendering it useless. The tech can only be used on body parts that are „pointing” toward him, like when the opponent is punching or kicking or just pointing at the user. Otherwise it would only make the cuts. Same goes for the head too. The maximum size of the tech is 3 meters in diameter, but the user can freely change it while it's smaller than that and has the appropriate range. If the target is in a 5 meters radius, the user can freely manipulate the size of the tech, starting with a very small size that only twists a finger to a 3 meters wide one that can rotate the target. However if the target is more than 5 meters away up to 15 meters, the user can only make the width of the twister between 1-3 meters.
    - can only be used 4 times per battle
    - can only be taught by Frozenstein

    How the technique works and basic position looks like:


    I removed that 5 meters limitation as it made the jutsu from a short-mid one to a short ranged one and instead added it in the explanation with a bit different effects.

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    Became unreasonable. You can do this anywhere you want basically and exploit it in many ways. Besides, localized similar wind techniques have already been made and so has the concept. One thing is your original submission which is a "taijutsu counter" technique of sorts, another is the mid range, large scale version you want to have approved.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Suiton: Suetto no Potteri Buta) – Water Release: Sweat of the Bloated Pig
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will perform the Boar Handseal whilst focusing their chakra into a nearby solid element e.g. Earth, Paper, Sand, Clay and etc. The resulting effect will be the miniscule drops of water residing in the air around it, quickly converging on the target material/element, aiming to seep through the pores, cracks and crevices in the material, if not simply being absorbed by it. Whilst doing this, the water will take on a very dense, viscous and adhesive quality similar to that of Water Release: Starch Syrup Capture Field. The resulting effect of this forced absorption of moisture will cause the affected substance to gorge and inflate to an incredible size, but also become so heavy that it can no longer move, remain airborne or even be manipulated in the slightest. To signify this, the affected material will begin oozing out adhesive water from its openings, almost overflowing due to the great amount of sticky water its been forced to absorb e.g. Clay creatures will be "drooling" adhesive water from their mouths. This technique will have varying effects on different elements e.g. Paper will become too heavy/sticky and will begin to cling to other sheets of paper, Sand will become almost impossible to control/manipulate, Clay will become incapable of detonation and etc. However since the basis of this technique relies on water absorption, the user will be physically incapable of using it on metal or crystal-based elements. Furthermore, the affected material/element must be completely in solid form and not partially e.g. cannot effect Mud, Lava and similar solid-like liquids.

    Note: Can only be used four times per battle
    Note: Can only be Taught by Negative Knight
    Note: Cannot be used on consecutive turns
    Note: Can only be used on elements/materials and not on people directly
    Note: Follows elemental weaknesses and strengths

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    Love it. Well done.

    (Doton/Suiton: Yurasu Oomizu) – Earth/Water Release: Seismic Tsunami
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 90 (-40 damage to the user)
    Description: Kakuzu will connect his wrists together and push his hands outwards whilst pointing them at the floor directly below him before protruding his Suiton mask from either of them. Simultaneously, he will release his doton chakra into the ground below to cause a massive wave of earth to spread out from his position in a circular motion (360 degrees around him) which will crush anyone and anything in its wake, as well as devastate the terrain on an unimaginable level. The wave of earth will grow in height as it spreads out, leaving the resulting effect as a massive crater in the middle of the battlefield, the center point of the newly formed crater being the user's position. As the wave of earth is released in every direction, the suiton mask will spew an unimaginable quantity of water from its mouth, slightly greater than the amount produced by Kisame's signature Great Exploding Water Colliding Wave. The wave of water will uplift the user high into the air, whilst spreading out in every direction to flood the vicinity around the user, the vast quantity of liquid quickly filling up the earthen crater, causing for the creation of a water source on near oceanic proportions. The water created by this technique is similar to that of Water Release: Starch Syrup Capture Field, its sheer adhestivity, density and viscosity making it impossible for electrical currents to be conducted along it, minimizing the user's vulnerability whilst utilizing this technique. This adhesive water will ensnare any opponents unlucky enough to come into contact with it, trapping them in a dense layer of sticky slime-like water, preventing further mobility. However since the sticky water is created from the user's own chakra, they will not be affected by the adhesiveness of the created water source. The water source (and crater) created via this technique will span a thirty meter radius around the user's position and is considered a "Large water source", abundant enough to be used for techniques like Water Release: Great Shark Missile Technique and Water Release: A Thousand Feeding Sharks. Using this technique will take a visible and fairly significant toll on the user's body, making them incapable of using S-Rank and above Doton in the same and next turn, no handseals for two turns and no Forbidden Ranked elemental jutsu in their next turn.

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
    Note: Can only be Taught by Negative Knight
    Note: No S-Rank or above Doton in the user's same and next turn
    Note: No handseals for two turns
    Note: No Forbidden Ranked Elemental jutsu in the user's next turn

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    The fact that its sticky doesn't alter the electrical interaction. Also, the earth part of the technique and the water part have both already been done as you describe it. I can't approve this as its basically putting two things already made into one.

    Quote Originally Posted by Negative Knight View Post
    -Resubmitting-

    (Kuro Ito Soshi Senjigusuri) – Dark Threads Elemental Infusion
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A (+5 to infuse element)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Kakuzu will imbue one of the four basic elemental chakras into all of his dark threads related jutsu (for the next five turns) to cause them to take on a specific set of properties. If the user channels their raiton chakra into the threads, their penetrative abilities will heightened and the threads themselves will be electrified, giving them paralyzing capabilities. If the user channels their suiton chakra into the threads, they will become coated in a thick layer of adhesive water (similar to Water Release: Starch Syrup Capture Field), giving them adhesive properties and the ability to stick to people/objects. They will also become extremely resistant to burning and will short-circuit electricity, meaning electrical currents can't be channeled along them. This is because unlike normal suiton, the adhesive water is so viscous and dense that it resembles oil more than it does water, therefore making it an electrical insulator. If the user channels their doton chakra into the threads, they will take on a pitch-black metallic sheen and be hardened to the extent they can clash with swords and endure powerful impact forces. This doesn't hinder the user's mobility in the slightest as the extremely high flexibility of Kakuzu's threads cancels out with the hardening created by channeling doton chakra. Granted they become more stiff and taut, but this simply makes the threads more tensile rather than unmovable. If the user channels their fuuton chakra into the threads, their cutting capabilities will be enhanced and electrical currents will be impossible to conduct along them. The jutsu itself doesn't add any damage or range to techniques used in conjunction with it. It simply serves the purpose of infusing the dark threads with elemental chakra to cause the technique to become an elemental jutsu of the same rank e.g. a B-Rank dark threads jutsu infused with doton chakra will become a B-Rank doton jutsu. Elemental infusions via this method will respect all elemental strengths and weaknesses of the infused element. Activating this ability is instant and does not consume any time whatsoever.

    Note: Lasts for Five turns
    Note: Can only be used thrice per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
    Note: Can only be Taught by Negative Knight
    Note: If raiton chakra is infused, paralysis caused by contact with the threads lasts for one turn.
    Note: The metallic sheen of infusing doton chakra is purely cosmetic
    ______________
    -Declined- The technique has a lot of things wrong with it mainly because the threads exist in side Kakuzu's own body, how would you be making the threads have a sticky quality without it being stuck into your body from the inside, same for lightning, you will be electrified, also earth will severely increase your mass, you get the idea.
    (Kuro Ito Soshi Senjigusuri) – Dark Threads Elemental Infusion
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A (+5 to infuse element)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Kakuzu will imbue one of the three basic elemental chakras (Earth, Wind and Water) into all of his dark threads related jutsu (for the next five turns) to cause them to take on a specific set of properties. If the user channels their suiton chakra into the threads, they will become coated in a thick layer of adhesive water (similar to Water Release: Starch Syrup Capture Field), giving them adhesive properties and the ability to stick to people/objects. They will also become extremely resistant to burning and will short-circuit electricity, meaning electrical currents can't be channeled along them. This is because unlike normal suiton, the adhesive water is so viscous and dense that it resembles oil more than it does water, therefore making it an electrical insulator. The method employed in channeling suiton chakra is similar to that of a spider creating silk from its glands, where he will secrete the adhesive suiton chakra onto the threads as they leave his body, which is why the user isn't stuck to the threads internally. If the user channels their doton chakra into the threads, they will take on a pitch-black metallic sheen and be hardened to the extent they can clash with swords and endure powerful impact forces. This doesn't hinder the user's mobility in the slightest as the extremely high flexibility of Kakuzu's threads cancels out with the hardening created by channeling doton chakra. Granted they become more stiff and taut, but this simply makes the threads more tensile rather than unmovable. Furthermore, the hardening follows a similar method to that of Earth Release: Earth Spear, which hardens the skin without significantly increasing the object/person's mass. If the user channels their fuuton chakra into the threads, their cutting capabilities will be enhanced and electrical currents will be impossible to conduct along them. The jutsu itself doesn't add any damage or range to techniques used in conjunction with it. It simply serves the purpose of infusing the dark threads with elemental chakra to cause the technique to become an elemental jutsu of the same rank e.g. a B-Rank dark threads jutsu infused with doton chakra will become a B-Rank doton jutsu. Elemental infusions via this method will respect all elemental strengths and weaknesses of the infused element. Activating this ability is instant and does not consume any time whatsoever. All of these methods of infusing elemental chakra occur whilst the threads are leaving the user's body (to perform a technique), meaning they will have no negative effects on the user's body (e.g. causing them to become rigid due to threads clinging to one another).

    Note: Lasts for Five turns
    Note: Can only be used thrice per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
    Note: Can only be Taught by Negative Knight
    Note: The metallic sheen of infusing doton chakra is purely cosmetic

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    CF approval proof: http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...=1#post8871180

    (Shippuusuka Tatakai no Jutsu: Kazedama) - Hurricane Skater Martial Arts: Wind Bomb
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Close(Send the user to mid range)
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: Whilst using Hurricane Skater Martial Arts: The Twister Skater, the user manipulate the wind twisting below his skater and cause it to explode sending himself flying in the direction he balanced the skater against. Once the user get close to the floor again, the hurricane will be reformed again below the skater, keeping the user flying in his new location. If this technique was preformed at close range of an enemy/enemies, he will suffer multiple minor cuts and be blown away of the user from the blast which doesn't harm the user for his skater would protect him.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Must have used Hurricane Skater Martial Arts: The Twister Skater before forming this technique.
    __________________
    -Leaving for Scorps-


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    Speed of the movement? Why is this an A-Rank? B-Rank tops.

    | Futon: Hanpatsu Hitofuki | - Wind Style: Upstream Gust
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: Holding a huge fan, the user opens his fan against the ground then swing it upward releasing an extraordinarily strong gust of wind that is quite large(about 4 meters long/wide) that cuts through the surface of the ground as it travel forward. Through the way of this technique, it gets separated into two; one that continues forward and cut through the surface of the ground while the back of the wind current collects the debris and dust and contain them in a slower wind gust that follows the original which continues at high speed toward the enemy with a size that is hard to avoid. The second part of the technique follows the first at a slower speed but it's still slightly fast is weaker than the first itself, but it spread dust through out the area from mid to long range of the user. This technique acts effectively against elemental techniques of its rank and below that moves over or close to the surface of the ground because it erase the upper level of it as it move forward. Through chakra manipulation the user could focus the gust to remain united but that will make the jutsu lose its ability to spread dust or debris.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Must be a huge folding fan or war fan user to preform this technique(And have mentioned that in your biography)
    _______________
    -Declined- good idea, but you need to determine it's reasonable size, mention that the other blast doesn't do damage, only spreads the dust etc, and one last thing, remove the colored.


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    Art of the Jade Warp:: Branches of Spears -Tamamayu no Jutsu: Bunkayari
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: While being armored with Tamamayu, the user release fast, hardened, groups of strings that take the shape of multiple spears that could pierce or screw through multiple targets. While preforming this technique, the user manipulate the spears to be release as wide, concentrated, sharp or curved as he wishes and for the uses he wants, making this technique useful in many strategies. The user could also use this technique against solids to push himself away from a specific location. Moreover, The user can use this technique through the ground, by sending the strings through the ground then group it below the target and preform the technique, but that will slightly slow its formation and it makes a great combo with elemental short ranged techniques such as Lightning Release: One Thousand Birds Current, Water Release: Hard Whirlpool Water Blade, Fire Release: Dragon Fire Technique, wind chakra weapon-enhancing techniques or after using Hiding Like A Mole and make the strings move through the ground before preforming this one. The user can detach all any of the used strings in this technique in a whim and still be able to preform other Tamamayu arts.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Must wield Tamamayu to be able to preform this technique.
    ___________________
    -Declined- This is a multitude of techniques crammed in one.
    CF approval proof: http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...=1#post8871180

    (Shippuusuka Tatakai no Jutsu: Kazedama) - Hurricane Skater Martial Arts: Wind Bomb
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Close(Send the user/effected enemies to mid range)
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: Whilst using Hurricane Skater Martial Arts: The Twister Skater, the user manipulate the wind twisting below his skater and cause it to explode sending himself flying in the direction he balanced the skater against at a speed slightly higher than his rank's top speed. Once the user get close to the floor again, the hurricane will be reformed below the skater keeping the user flying in his new location. If this technique was preformed at close range of an enemy/enemies, he will suffer multiple minor cuts and be blown away of the user from the blast which doesn't harm the user for his skater would protect him.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Must have used Hurricane Skater Martial Arts: The Twister Skater before forming this technique.

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    On resubmissions you are required to bold every change you made into the technique.

    | Futon: Hanpatsu Hitofuki | - Wind Style: Upstream Gust
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: Holding a huge fan, the user opens his fan against the ground then swing it upward releasing an extraordinarily strong gust of wind that is quite large that cuts through the surface of the ground as it travel forward. Through the way of this technique, it gets separated into two; one that continues forward and cut through the surface of the ground and is about 2 meters long, 3 meters wide and 3 meters tall while the back of the wind current collects the debris and dust and contain them in a slower wind gust which doesn't preform any damages that follows the original with a larger size(about 4 meters long, 5 meters wide and as tall as the first which continues at high speed toward the enemy with a size that is hard to avoid. The second part of the technique follows the first at a slower speed but it's still slightly fast is weaker than the first itself, but it spread dust through out the area from mid to long range of the user. Through chakra manipulation the user could focus the gust to remain united but that will make the jutsu lose its ability to spread dust or debris.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Must be a huge folding fan or war fan user to preform this technique(And have mentioned that in your biography)

    Proof of CW approval

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    DNR.

    Art of the Jade Warp: Branches of Spears -Tamamayu no Jutsu: Bunkayari
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: While being armored with Tamamayu, the user release fast, hardened, groups of strings that take the shape of multiple spears that could pierce or screw through multiple targets. While preforming this technique, the user manipulate the spears to be release as wide, concentrated, sharp or curved as he wishes and for the uses he wants making this technique useful in many strategies depending on the user's creativity and intelligence. The user can detach all any of the used strings in this technique in a whim and still be able to preform other Tamamayu arts.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Must wield Tamamayu to be able to preform this technique.

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    similar to existing techniques. DNR.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 08-02-2013 at 04:46 PM.

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    (Doton: Supaiku no ken) Earth Style : Fist of Spikes
    Type:Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank:B-Rank
    Range:Short Range
    Chakra:20 Chakra
    Damage:(+15 to Taijutsu techniques)
    Description: while dealing a punch to the opponent the user will be gathering doton chakra in his fist. once his fist hits the opponent he will release the chakra and shape it as 1 meter long 10 stone spikes emerging from his skin. the stone spikes are very dense and can penetrate normal humans' body and kill them but it's vulnerable against lightning based jutsus
    note: can last for 2 turns if it wasn't destroyed
    note: can be used 6 times per battle
    note: only Pain... can teach this jutsu

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    imagine yourself with 10 1 meter long spikes coming out of your fist and try to invision how it would be like to actually use that in battle... yeah...ridiculous.




    (Burasunakkuru) Brass Knuckle
    Type:Weapon
    Rank:B-Rank
    Range:Short Range
    Chakra:20 Chakra
    Damage:(+15 to all Taijutsu techniques and +30 if chakra was channeled into it)
    Description: This pair of Brass knuckles were made of a metal that conducts chakra (the same metal Asuma's blades were made of). after wearing them the user can channel his chakra into it to conflict more damage to the target. by channeling fuuton chakra into it the user will make crescent-shaped wind float around his hand that will make small cuts to the target's body. channeling katon chakra to it will make a layer of flames to cover the user's fists and it will scorch the target's body if he's hit by it. after channeling doton chakra into the pair brass knuckles, it will form 5 centimeters long stone spike to emerge from it and it will penetrate the opponent's if he's hit by it. if the user conducts raiton chakra into it lightning will start crackling around the fists of the user and will shock the opponent if he is hit by it
    note: can not be used while the user is holding a sword
    note: the user can't perform handseals while using it
    note: can only be used by Pain...


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    Done before and bonus are unreasonable.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 08-02-2013 at 04:52 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    ((Kuchiyose:Gamaotome) Summoning: Gamaotome
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    Gamaotome is one of the few female toads that reside on mt. myoboku. She is of very small stature being able to fit in the palm of a persons hand and to hide in the hair of most people. Her adtitude is sweet and caring. She has a great love for her summoner due to this she can communicate telepathiclly with summoner. Being so small in stature she wasn't very adapt at fighting. She has no elemental affinity. She knew toads had a natural sensing ability, so to compensate for her lack of fighting ability's she trained and honed her sensing ability.

    -Is a personal summon so stays on the field infinitely.
    -Lives in the bios clothes or hair.
    -Her sensing ability is the normal cannon one but can only be activated once per battle. After that she becomes tired and falls asleep and can't be used anymore that battle.
    -Can be summoned by others. For other people she stays on the field for four turns.
    -Summoned once per battle.
    Looks




    ______________
    -Declined- If Xylon hadn't agreed to that sensing ability i would've declined it, but what i'm not going to allow is a sensing ability along with a telepathic ability, telepathic abilities are specific to the Yamanaka clan, so i'm not going to allow a summon to have it.
    ((Kuchiyose:Gamaotome) Summoning: Gamaotome
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    Gamaotome is one of the few female toads that reside on mt. myoboku. She is of very small stature being able to fit in the palm of a persons hand and to hide in the hair of most people. Her adtitude is sweet and caring. She has a great love for her summoner. Being so small in stature she wasn't very adapt at fighting. She has no elemental affinity. She knew toads had a natural sensing ability, so to compensate for her lack of fighting ability's she trained and honed her sensing ability.

    -Is a personal summon so stays on the field infinitely.
    -Lives in the bios clothes or hair.
    -Her sensing ability is the normal cannon one but can only be activated once per battle. After that she becomes tired and falls asleep and can't be used anymore that battle.
    -Can be summoned by others. For other people she stays on the field for four turns.
    -Summoned once per battle.
    Looks





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    Quote Originally Posted by Aoi. View Post
    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu:Derira Reitō kōgō) Summoning Technique : Dalila The Frozen Empress
    Type:Summon
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 60
    Damage:
    Description:The user will bite there thumb,drawing the blood or by using blood from any other way(must still be there own),then by slamming there hand on the ground the user will summon Dalila The Frozen Empress.Dalila is the twin sister of Caius but unlike Caius's dark behavoir,Dalila is much more lighter than he is.Dalila is the complete opposite of Caius where as her brother is much more offensive,Dalila is much more defensive,taking only half the from techniques used against her by applying a special chakra coat around her body,but her elements are much weaker where as a technique doing 30 will be reduced to 15.She has no antlers like her brother due to her being a female,she is able however to use Water and Wind techniques up to A-Rank.She is no as fast as her brother but can manage on her own,moving at speeds equal to a Taijutsu Specialist at S-Class rank.She is very intellegent and is very friendly with people allowing 4 people to ride on her back.She is also capable of standing on 2 feet,though she prefers 4 legs.

    -Dalila has Hp of 100
    -Dalila can remain for 4 turns
    -Dalilia can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Water/Wind Moves used by Dalila counts as towards 3 jutsu limit.

    Link to contract approval:http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...s#post10019650

    ♠ All Pending ♠
    Leaving for Scorps/Xylon. I'm not sure if half of those things are technically allowed.


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    ±± Declined ±±
    Same as above.
    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu:Derira Reitō kōgō) Summoning Technique : Dalila The Frozen Empress
    Type:Summon
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 60
    Damage:
    Description:The user will bite there thumb, drawing the blood or by using blood from any other way (must still be there own), then by slamming there hand on the ground the user will summon Dalila The Frozen Empress. She stands 3 meters tall. Her fur is a light blue color. Dalila's attitude is that of a caring mother often being the one to look after the other deers. She has no antlers due to her being a female, she is able however to use Water up to A-Rank. She can manage on her own, moving at speeds equal to a Taijutsu Specialist at S-Class rank. She is very intellegent and is very friendly with people allowing 2 people to ride on her back. She is also capable of standing on 2 feet, though she prefers 4 legs.

    -Dalila can remain for 4 turns
    -Dalilia can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Water Moves used by Dalila counts towards 3 jutsu limit.

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     All Declined 
    banned.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 08-02-2013 at 04:52 PM.

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    Resubmitting:

    (Raiton: Joushou tsuchi) - Lightning Release: Ascending Earth
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: A stronger version of Lightning release: roaring earth. The user forms the ram handseal and concentrates their lightning chakra all throughout their body. Once the target is within close range, the user slams their hands on the ground, releasing a significant amount electricity along the ground and is shot upward below the targets feet in the form of a much larger vertical column of electricity. The lightning upon impact, lifts the target into the air before dropping them down.

    Restriction:
    -Physical contact with the ground must be made
    -Can be used up to 3 times
    -Can only be taught by fang
    _____________
    -Approved- keep in mind that the technique doesn't cause paralysis, only numbing and physical damage.


    Link to approval #2293: http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...1#post10018462

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Doryuzu) - Summoning Technique: Excadrill
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: n/a
    Description:After performing the necessary handsigns, the user slams their hand to summon Excadrill. Excadrill is the second in command of the moles and one of the strongest among them under the boss. Excadrill is 45 cm and wears jagged axe-like armor pieces on his arms as well as a jagged axe-like helmet placed slightly covering his face. He uses his 'shovels' to aid him in digging or for striking his target. Excadrill has the ability to manipulate sources of fire provided that it is already there. This allows him to create spiraling flames, fire pillars, streams of fire, and fiery explosions equaling to A-rank in strength.

    Restriction:
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Must have signed the mole contract.
    -His Katon counts as a move.
    -Requires a ground source.
    -Lasts up to 4 turns.
    _______________
    -Declined- the colored portion can't be approved because it's too broad, not to mention free manipulation to the fire won't be allowed.


    link to contract post #2293: http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...1#post10018462
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    New submission:

    (Chimeiteki Keiteki) - Fatal Horn
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra: N/a
    Damage: N/a
    Description: Is a hammer with the appearance of a Ram's head as the hammers face and has a chain linked to a spiked metal ball. The head is gold in color, and the 'horns' of the head have a silver color, while the ball's 'shell' is blue with white spikes. The weapon is made of a sturdy, durable metal and has the ability to crush Ice and Earth techniques up to B-rank. The spiked mace is placed/rested on top of the hammer like the Kendama. Originally it belonged to a famous warrior from Sunagakure who participated in the third ninja war and died fighting. The user can attack when the hammer and ball are together by using the hammer to hit the ball a few times to build up power then hitting it at high speed towards the opponent. The Hammer and ball can be disconnected to perform separate attacks. The hammer's handle has a built-in mechanism that allows it to extend to mid-range to 'Ram' the target and send them backward.

    Restrictions
    -Can only be wielded by Fang.
    -Each hammer-based technique counts as a move.
    -The hammer and mace cannot separate and form back on the same turn.
    -Only one hammer technique per turn.

    _______________
    -Declined- Interesting, the colored portion should have a rank to it and a usage limit, then it should be good to go.
    ~Resubmitting~

    (Chimeiteki Keiteki) - Fatal Horn
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra: N/a
    Damage: N/a
    Description: Is a hammer with the appearance of a Ram's head as the hammers face and has a chain linked to a spiked metal ball. The head is gold in color, and the 'horns' of the head have a silver color, while the ball's 'shell' is blue with white spikes. The weapon is made of a sturdy, durable metal and has the ability to crush Ice and Earth techniques up to B-rank. The spiked mace is placed/rested on top of the hammer like the Kendama. Originally it belonged to a famous warrior from Sunagakure who participated in the third ninja war and died fighting. The user can attack when the hammer and ball are together by using the hammer to hit the ball a few times to build up power then hitting it at high speed towards the opponent. The Hammer and ball can be disconnected to perform separate attacks. The hammer's handle has a built-in mechanism that allows it to extend to mid-range to 'Ram' the target and send them backward or to smash them.

    Restrictions
    -Can only be wielded by Fang.
    -Each hammer-based technique counts as a move.
    -The hammer and ball cannot separate and form back on the same turn.
    -Only one hammer technique per turn.
    -The user can separate and connect up to two times.
    -Extending the Hammer can be used up to three times.
    -When separated the Hammer & ball are both A-rank.
    -When the hammer is used to extend and knock the target backward or to smash them it is only C-rank.


    Changed it a bit.

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    Gather power? how and to what extent? a bit all over the place this weapon...

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Doryuzu) - Summoning Technique: Excadrill
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: n/a
    Description:After performing the necessary handsigns, the user slams their hand to summon Excadrill. Excadrill is the second in command of the moles and one of the strongest among them under the boss. Excadrill is 45 cm and wears jagged axe-like armor pieces on his arms as well as a jagged axe-like helmet placed slightly covering his face. He uses his 'shovels' to aid him in digging or for striking his target. Excadrill can perform mole techniques up to S-rank that are exclusive to only him and basic Taijutsu up to C-rank except NB Tai and EIG.

    Restriction:
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Must have signed the mole contract.
    -His Mole techniques counts as a move.
    -Requires a ground source.
    -Lasts up to 4 turns.
    -His Taijutsu counts as move.

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    a 45cm tall mole doing taijutsu? his limbs aren't long enough nor does he have the size and strength needed for it... Doesn't seem feasible or logic.

    ==============================================
    ~New Submission~

    (Bakuretsu Nokogiri Kiba)- Exploding Saw Fang
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user creates three clones of their dog partner that will surround and lunge at the target, appearing to attack him, forcing them to evade by jumping upward. Once the target does this, the clones will explode dropping Makibishi on the ground, while the user and their real dog partner attack him from above from opposite sides., performing a ferious roll to send the target crashing into the Makibishi.

    Restrictions:
    -Must be a member of the Inuzuka clan.
    -Usable once per battle.

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    Clones of the dog? like shadow clones of the dog? DNR.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 08-02-2013 at 04:55 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: (Kuchiyose: Rekisen no Youhei Ekidona) - Echidna
    Scroll Owner: DrProof
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A (not currently)
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
    Description and Background: Echidnas are small, solitary mammals covered with coarse hair and spines. Superficially, they resemble the anteaters of South America and other spiny mammals such as hedgehogs and porcupines. They have elongated and slender snouts which function as both mouth and nose. Like the platypus, they are equipped with electrosensors, but while the platypus has 40,000 electroreceptors on its bill, the long-billed Echidna has only 2,000, and the short-billed Echidna, which lives in a drier environment, has no more than 400 located at the tip of its snout. They have very short, strong limbs with large claws, and are powerful diggers. Echidnas have tiny mouths and toothless jaws. The Echidna feeds by tearing open soft logs, anthills and the like, and using its long, sticky tongue, which protrudes from its snout, to collect prey.

    Note: Echidnas cannot use an elemental affinity.

    Echidna Contract Holders bear this tattoo:



    守る (Mamori Danryokusei) - Mamoru, The Protector
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40 [To Wield]
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Mamoru meaning protect is a Shuang Gou (Hook Sword) in which was was found on the outskirts of Sunagakure. This weapon was wielded by the Shodai Kazekage, his dying words were "Protect Sunagakure". Soon after the Shodai Kazekage's death the Kanji Symbol 守る was engraved upon the blade's hilt, integrating the Shodai's Will. The second era hadn't the potential to measure up to the Shodai's Will, not even the Nidaime Kazekage could wield the blade, thus out of frustration, and loss of hope, this blade was thrown out into the hot desert of Sunagakure left there to be forever forgotten.. Constantly beat, and subjected to various wind storms, sand, debris, and the thirst quenching temperature of the desert; this allowed the blade to develop a resilient exterior, along with a few distorted features. This weapon possesses one ability, in which is triggered by the Shodai Kazekage's will.

    Note: Can only be wielded by Sunagakure Shinobi.
    Note: Can only be wielded by DrProof.
    Note: The sword stays in play; even after the ability runs out.
    Note: Elemental Affinities can't be channeled through the sword.



    (Shodai Hokage no Desho u: Hogo) Will Of The Shodai Kazekage: Protect
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Due to the Shodai Kazekage's Will integrated into the weapon Mamoru, The Protector via the Kanji symbol 守る, the Shodai's Will, activates upon the performance of the Tiger Seal with one hand, in which the Kanji symbol 守る will glow bright orange resonating the Shodai Kazekage's voice into the user's head voicing the command: "Protect!". This technique allows the wielder to use the Shodai's Will to completely deflect a total of 3 elemental attacks (S-Rank: 1, A-Rank: 2, B-Rank: 3, C-Rank: 4, D-Rank: 5) back at the user. In addition, due to the instant surge of chakra distortion (Kazekage's Will resonating inside the user), the user is able to cancel out 1 S-Rank Genjutsu per battle; reducing the number of elemental attacks capable of being deflected by 1.
    -Can only be used three times per battle.
    -Cancellation of Genjutsu reduces its ability to be used three times into two.



    暴行 (Bōkō Asaruto) - Bōkō, The Assaulter
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40 [To Wield]
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Bōkō meaning Assault is a Shuang Gou (Hook Sword) in which was created by the Nidaime Kazekage after his frustration in attempting to wield "Mamoru, The Protector". The Nidaime Kazekage was heavily known to have studied the Ichibi, Shukaku, in which he wanted to gain the power to subdue, and use its power. Realizing that its weakness was gold (due to Gold being heavier than Sand; weighing down the Ichibi) however, the Kazekage had no success in creating a Gold Dust manipulation (Such as Yondaime Kazekage's Gold Dust), triggering him to incorporate Gold into this sword. Due to this sword being made of Gold it is quite heavy, along with it being both a great heat, and electricity conductor. This weapon possesses one ability in which is triggered by the conductibility of its structure; Gold.

    Note: Can only be wielded by Sunagakure Shinobi.
    Note: Can only be wielded by DrProof.
    Note: The sword stays in play; even after the ability runs out.
    Note: Elemental Affinities cannot be channeled through the sword; excluding via its ability.



    (Goorudo Ootokurin: Zokuseino Henkou) - Gold Conductibility: Attribute Change
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Due to the sword Bōkō being made of complete gold its conductibility against heat, and electricity is quite powerful. When facing against Katon/Raiton based techniques Bōkō's conductibility will attract any source of heat/electricity causing the assault to be absorbed into Bōkō. Once the Katon/Raiton is absorbed into Bōkō, the blade takes on the attributes of the conducted Katon/Raiton changing its attributes to that of the technique previously conduct; the attributes are copied exactly the same meaning: Exact Rank, and Affinity. Once the attribute is copied the user of Bōkō can use the elemental/rank advantage against their opponent by performing a single handed Ram hand seal. When trying to counter an elemental assault the sword will allow the user to emit a Katon/Raiton (which ever was conducted) of which ever rank was absorbed/conduct and will coat the sword in a Katon/Raiton shroud allowing the user to slash/block the incoming techniques.
    -Can only be used three times per battle.
    -Attribute Change lasts 1 turn.

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    you can only make 3 submissions per cycle. Take this as a warning as next time you'll be banned from the thread for at least 3 cycles.
     
         
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    (Doton/Suiton: Boukun Rokujou) – Earth/Water Release: Tyrannical Aggravation
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Defensive/Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A (80 damage if used to attack the opponent)
    Description: The user will release their doton chakra into the ground to cause two to four colossal armoured prehistoric crocodile-like creatures composed entirely of earth (and coated in adhesive mud) to surface beneath or around their position, each being the same size as the A-Rank Stone Golem. The user will then focus their suiton chakra into each of the creatures to cause the humanoid crocodiles to secrete a dense layer of adhesive water (Similar to Water Release: Starch Syrup Capture Field) from every point on their gargantuan bodies, causing the already present layer of adhesive mud to fuse with the sticky water to make for a very dense, viscous and adhesive mixture. As a result the crocodiles become capable of traversing through even the densest and stickiest of mediums e.g. Swamp of the Underworld. This makes them extremely proficient in swimming through similar liquids, with their maneuverability being heightened the denser the medium they are traveling through. On land, these creatures are extremely sluggish, in water or when they are submerged with solid ground, they match the speed of an average aquatic creature, in adhesive mud and liquid metals, their speed is unsurpassed, partly because they aren't hampered by the sheer viscousity of such mediums. The composition of the adhesive water/mud-like layer grants it properties of being both extremely viscous and an unparalleled level of stickiness. The viscosity of the mixture makes it so that weapons or physical objects can only partially pass through it until they run out of momentum, making Taijutsu and Kenjutsu ineffective against these creatures, as the user's body/weapon will cling to them, preventing further maneuverability. This also translates to kunai, swords and other projectiles become trapped inside the mixture. Its stickiness also grants it the effect of being able to congeal semi-solid elements together such as: Sand, Gold sand and Iron sand. Rendering them ineffective as they can no longer reform and reshape, a property they depend on in combat. This interaction is similar to the 2nd Mizukage's oily water breaking down Gaara's sand, but on a much higher level, making it capable of affecting all sand-based elements. One final property granted by the adhesive water/mud-like layer is that the creatures become extremely resistant to burning and heat based elements (due to infusion of water), protecting the hard, rocky interior of the large beasts. Alternatively, these crocodiles can be used whilst the user is submerged in a swamp or they can be spewed directly from the user's mouth, meaning the user doesn't have to be in contact with the ground to use this technique. The crocodiles also possess extremely long jaws capable of biting down with crushing force and spiked tails which can be used for physical attacks.

    Note: Creatures last for a maximum of four turns
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle
    Note: Can only be taught by -Venom-



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     Declined 
    A bit too many properties stacked on eachother. Besides, you cannot claim their immunity to Taijutsu and Kenjutsu based on their sticky properties. There are Taijutsu and Kenjutsu technique which don't work based on that physical interaction so those would work. It should count as two moves since you're essentially using two techniques. and I want a note stating exactly what these creatures can endure in terms of defensive abilities.

    (Doton/Suiton: Abura Sodachi) – Earth/Water Release: Gluttonous Inflation
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will focus their doton chakra into the ground anywhere on the battlefield, utilizing it to soften it to the extent it becomes almost flimsy, flexible enough to bend under even the smallest of stresses. In one smooth motion, they will then focus their suiton chakra into the ground to cause the entirety of the layer beneath the newly softened ground to gorge and fill up with a mass of extremely adhesive water similar to that of Water Release: Starch Syrup Capture Field. This water will build up in certain areas more than others, causing for the formation of hills and trenches alike, the hills being full to the brim of sticky water. The resulting effect of the adhesive water as well as the softened ground causes a trampoline-like effect, causing the terrain to become elastic enough to "bounce" around it without feeling harm nor undergoing difficulty. Furthermore, when the opponent steps, jumps or exerts even the most minute of forces on the ground below their feet, it will bend inward at an alarming rate, throwing them completely off balance before projecting them away into the air, before they land the same process repeats itself. Since the user is so attuned to fighting with this technique active, they will have no difficulty moving around the terrain. Once the hills are created, the user (at any time) can perform the Boar Handseal to cause that respective hill to erupt in a violent maelstrom of water, completely trapping the affected target in a dense layer of adhesive water, completely preventing their mobility. Alternatively, the user can use this technique on other rocky constructs (including the opponent's techniques) to serve a whole multitude of other purposes. On rocky creations such as Earth Release: Stone Golem and Earth Release: Earth and Stone Dragon Technique, the sudden softening and inflation of water will make them too slow, heavy and sluggish to even move, let alone pose a threat to the user. On terrain-affecting techniques such as Earth Release: Destructive Rising Rock Pillars and Earth Release: Anitlion Technique, the user will make it so they become so flexible, flimsy and elastic, that won't be capable of crushing/impaling the user, as well as making the user capable of "bouncing" away from them. Despite the fact this technique manipulates two chakra natures, each nature manipulation happens one after the other, with such speed, efficiency and chakra control, that this technique happens at the same speed of an average technique.

    Note: Effects last for five turns
    Note: Can only be used three times per battle
    Note: Can only be Taught by -Venom-
    Note: Cannot be used on consecutive turns
    Note: No S-Rank Suiton in the user's next turn
    Note: Doesn't require contact with the ground/affected target



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     Declined 
    DNR. Collides with existing customs.

    (Doton/Fuuton: Funjin Kachuu) – Earth/Wind Release: Scouring Vortexes
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A (80 damage if the opponent becomes trapped in the worm hole)
    Description: The user will release their doton chakra into the ground to cause multiple sections of earth around the opponent to lower themselves in a circular-like shape, in a similar manner to Earth Release: Moving Earth Core. In the same motion, they will then focus their fuuton chakra into each and every one of the lowered sections of earth, before performing a single handseal to trigger a mild vacuum-like effect which will suck any objects/people moving directly over it to be sucked deep into the depths of the hole. Inside the hole, the wind chakra will be spiraling in a clockwise motion in the same manner as a tornado, carrying deposits of rock, dust, dirt and debris which greatly augments the cutting power of the already potent wind formation. Anyone or anything unfortunate enough to be caught inside one of the tornadoes will be skinned alive due to the sheer abrasiveness of the dust-infused wind, making this technique capable of even slicing through solid rock to reach its intended target. More commonly that not, the user will create the wormholes in a secure formation around the opponent to ensure any thrown projectiles or solid constructs they send towards the user will be promptly sucked into one of the wormholes, quickly being incinerated by the raging winds. This makes this technique exceedingly useful in countering techniques such as Earth Release: Stone Golem and Earth Release: Earth and Stone Dragon Technique, as the moment they move over any one of the user's created wormholes, they will become incapable of escaping the pull of the wind formation. Alternatively, the user can skip the first part of the technique and use this directly on an already lowered section/part of the terrain.

    Note: Lasts five turns
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle
    Note: Can only be Taught by -Venom-
    Note: Can create a maximum of eight wormholes
    Note: Sections of earth can only be lowered a maximum of ten meters



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    Ridiculously OPed and exploitable. Too big of a scale. Really too unreasonable. You need to tone it down...way down.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    here
    dropped the above before it is approved


    (Buki: Tentei Papirusu)- Weapon: God's Papyrus
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: Every round active (-30) | Round= 1 turn from opponent and myself
    Damage: N/A
    Description: God's papyrus is a weapon supposedly said to be a gift from god himself to men with extraordinary chakra control. In other words it is a gift to the gifted. As shown in the picture at the top it is simply a bandage. To an extent that is true, god's papyrus is an extremely long bandage that warps around the user's body. But the trick to this weapon is it is a living object. Similar to how kisame's sword acts on it's own will and interacts with the user. God's papyrus is able to do the same. But nothing in life is free, in order for the bandages to move about freely, the user has to give up a portion of his chakra. Willingly or unwillingly, if god's papyrus is attached to the user, it will take chakra from the user's body. As stated earlier God's papyrus is a living object and it can move about at it's own will. Through intense training it can grow accustomed to the user and act as an extension of his own body parts. God's papyrus is approximately 15 meters long. 5 of it's meters wrap around the user's body and the other 10 can be used for what ever purposes. Being a gift from god, god's papyrus is not made of any normal material. Being made of the a strong fiber and the user's chakra god's papyrus is indestructible. The bandages have 4 main outlets on the user's body. His left and right feet and his left and right hands. Due to this, these body parts are left bare and open for attacks or other purposes. On each end of these bandages as well as the outlet body parts is a small mark which conjoins the bandages with the user. There chakra systems and thoughts. But they are still two different beings, capable of acting on there own will. A minor drawback to these bandages is if the user runs out of chakra the bandages "die" so to speak. (Just resting) But all coins have a flip side, when the bandages die whatever was stored inside the bandages goes back into the user's body. The last and probably most basic ability of God's papyrus is it's indestructible bond with the user. As long as the bandages have chakra stored inside them, they are indestructible and can't be ripped through basic attacks. (Taijutsu and Weapons) The bandages are conjoined to the user both through chakra and body meaning the user's body is able to resist weaponry based attacks in areas covered by bandages. The bandages are capable of thought and acts like a conscience to the user. All memories and knowledge the user has are linked to the bandages.
    Abilities:
    -Backwards Compatible, so anything that is stored within the bandages can be reverted back to the user.
    -God's papyrus is indestructible
    -God's Papyrus is a living being (Is able to move on it's own)
    -The user and the bandages are fully attached to each other. (Similar to a leach or a tick stuck to your skin, extremely hard to remove)
    -Is resistant to C rank ninjutsu (Elemental included)
    -Absorbs whatever chakra is in the user's body. (Including genjutsu, only up to B rank)
    -Capable of thought and perception (Knows whatever the user knows)
    -Does not conduct the user's attacks

    The below abilities are passive through the chakra absorption of the bandages:
    (Buki Waza: Shinen Yunizon)- Weapon Technique: Thought Unison
    Type: Supplementary/Passive
    Rank: C Rank
    Range: Self
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The bandages while the connected to the user absorbs and stores the user's chakra within itself so that the user and the bandages thought and perception are united. Giving the bandages the ability to think for the user and guide the user's decisions.
    Note: This ability is passive as long as the user's chakra is flowing
    Note: Does not work without a chakra source

    (Buki Waza: Chakra Yunizon)- Weapon Technique: Chakra Unison
    Type: Supplementary/Passive
    Rank: C Rank
    Range: Self
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The bandages while connected to the user absorb and store the user's chakra inside itself for future use and the ability to move about freely.
    Note: This ability is passive as long as the user's chakra is flowing
    Note: Does not work without a chakra source


    Restrictions:
    -Can't be used by Doujutsu users (The chakra flow to the user's eyes would divert the chakra form the bandages making it useless)
    -Can only be used twice per match
    -Can only be in affect 4 turns consecutively. (2 form the user 2 form the opponent)
    -When those 4 turns are done the bandages need 2 turns to rest/recharge before being able to be used again. (After those 4 turns they come back automatically
    -After the two times per match the bandages are just baggage not being able to be used again all chakra returns to the user
    -Can't have a curse mark or anything else that affects the user's chakra through outside use
    -Special Case: If genjutsu chakra is stored inside the bandages the bandages are unaffected by the genjutsu but when it's time for the chakra to be reverted back to the body the user will experience the genjutsu then.
    Other: The symbol that is on the bandages and outlet body parts, 団. A basic kanji which stands for unity it has no relation to fuuinjutsu what so ever. Can only be used/taught by Gecko.


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    Yeah...no. Unreasonable. I mean...come on... It has so many stacked things on it that its a mishmash of a weapon. Also...those Passive abilities? No.
     
         
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    (Kuchiyose: Garagarahebi) Summoning Rattlesnakes
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will summon up to 4 rattlesnakes whose size can vary from a size of 2 feet to 100 meters long. These snakes are all rattlesnakes meaning they have rattlesnake properties(heat sensing, ground vibration sensing). These snakes vary in color and size and serve only as basic warriors, having only the normal characteristics of snakes. Although they are quite simple snakes, they are very enduring and resistant and, when big enough (about 50 meters long) they can take up to B-Rank damage, and can help the summoner in many occasions.
    Note: requires snake contract.
    -Only 2 rattlesnakes over the size of 50 meters can be summoned in one instance
    -Can only be taught by -Blade-

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     Declined 
    Too big and generic. You're copying the cannon technique...

    (Genjutsu: Gatagata Ouchi Makai) Illusionary Arts: Rattle Pit of Hell
    Type:
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user commands any already summoned rattlesnakes by tapping his foot on the ground in a certain pattern causing the snakes to use their rattlers making a genjutsu inducing sound causing the enemy to believe they are falling into a 50ft pit of 100 6ft rattlesnakes ready to bite, tear, and rip them to shreds.
    -Can only be taught by -Blade-
    -Must have at least one rattlesnake in play

    http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...t=266888-Snake Contract Signing

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    DNR.
     
         
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    (Genjutsu: Genkaku)– Illusion Arts : Rigormortis
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    [/B]Description: For this technique, the user will perform the ram hand seal and send it into the opponents brain. This will target a select few areas. The ability to see, and feel. This genjutsu will first blind the opponent making them see all black, then 2 seconds later their vision will come back to normal, though, their muscles will feel very stiff, as if they have just died and rigor mortis has begun. The opponent will feel as if they are having an "awake" death, meaning that they can see everything but can't move as if in shock .Rigor mortis is the stiffness in your muscles after death. Though, in this state, it will take a lot of strain to move the arms or legs, almost like a paralysis. If the gen is not broken within two turns, the opponent goes back to normal.

    -Can only be taught by Light.
    -No S rank gen turn used
    - Can only be used 2x
    __________________
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    DNR. done before under many names.

    ( Fuuton: Asatsuyu) – Wind Release: Morning Dew
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage: 60
    Description: For this technique, the opponent will focus their wind chakra into the air around the opponent. With the ram hand seal, the user will create small orbs of wind about 2 inches wide. Exactly 20 orbs will be scattered around the opponent. These small orbs will then begin to budge, creating almost a pin of air to protrude from the the main structure. Due to the amount of small orbs, they can attack multiple opponents, depending on if they're in the “circle” where the orbs are stationed. Once the pins are formed, the user will say “Morning Dew”, causing the pin – orbs to close in on the opponent the speed of “Fuuton: Wind Bullets”.

    -No S-rank wind the turn this is used
    - Can only be used 2x
    -Can only be taught by Light.
    __________________
    -Declined- What main structure? i don't get how this attacks, does it push the opponent, or slice through his body? and what's this Fuuton: Wind Bullets?, quote it next time.


    ( Hyouton: Koutsuushadan ) - Ice Release: Blockade!
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: For this technique the user will send their water chakra into their palms and slam it on the floor, activating the cooling process. Once the water begins to gush upward, it will begin to get cooled by the wind chakra turning it into ice. This ice wall will create two semi – circles around the opponent and his ally's. This wall is more than one, it's two. Once this is used, they reaches 10 metes high, and 10 meters wide. The first wall [ the exterior one ] is equaled to an A rank technique, while the interior wall [ The one infront of user ] is equaled to a B rank technique. The walls of ice are 5 meters a part from each other, so the first wall is 5 meters from the second and the second is 5 meters from the user. The walls raise as fast as triple Rashenmon. Once the technique has been up/ still standing over 3 turns the ice then melts and water gushes down from above creating a water source.

    -Can only be used 1x
    -Can only be taught by Light.
    __________________
    -Declined- If there are two walls, one A-rank and one B-rank, then how is this technique an A-rank? also reduce the width of the walls.


    Fixed the damage/chakra
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    ( Fuuton: Asatsuyu) – Wind Release: Morning Dew
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage: 60
    Description: For this technique, the opponent will focus their wind chakra into the air around the opponent. With the ram hand seal, the user will create small orbs of wind about 2 inches wide. Exactly 20 orbs will be scattered around the opponent. These small orbs will then begin to budge, creating almost a pin of air to protrude from the the main structure. The main structure would be the orbs, meaning the pins of air will form from the orbs of air.. Due to the amount of small orbs, they can attack multiple opponents, depending on if they're in the “circle” where the orbs are stationed. Once the pins are formed, the user will say “Morning Dew”, causing the pin – orbs to close in on the opponent the speed of “Fuuton: Wind Bullets”. These pin - orbs strike the opponent by cutting along the skin. They can cut up to 4 inches into the opponent body

    -No S-rank wind the turn this is used
    - Can only be used 2x
    -Can only be taught by Light.

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    For me the whole concept doesn't really "work" so I'll leave it to Ryujin.

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    -Declined- DNR, you still didn't link or even clarify what's this "Futon: Wind Bullets" is, and this is a bit OP considering you don't have a limit of distance between the orbs and the opponent.


    ( Hyouton: Koutsuushadan ) - Ice Release: Blockade!
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: For this technique the user will send their water chakra into their palms and slam it on the floor, activating the cooling process. Once the water begins to gush upward, it will begin to get cooled by the wind chakra turning it into ice. This ice wall will create two semi – circles around the opponent and his ally's. This wall is more than one, it's two. Once this is used, they reaches 10 metes high, and 5 meters wide. The first wall [ the exterior one ] is equaled to an B rank technique, while the interior wall [ The one infront of user ] is equaled to a B rank technique. The walls of ice are 5 meters a part from each other, so the first wall is 5 meters from the second and the second is 5 meters from the user. The walls raise as fast as triple Rashenmon. Once the technique has been up/ still standing over 3 turns the ice then melts and water gushes down from above creating a water source.

    -Can only be used 1x
    -Can only be taught by Light

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    Too easily exploitable.
     
         
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    (Raiton: Bito Purusu) - Lightning Style: Beat Pulse
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user makes two handseals to cover his body in lightning right before getting hit by an attack. Getting hit, he uses the impact force from the blow received to generate large amounts of lightning chakra throughout his body to augment the power of his next lightning attack. Through this process, the power gained will be added to the damage of the users next offensive lightning technique. This is quite similar to Kirin in the sense that you generate lightning from an outside source though this only works for techniques that deal impact damage or lightning techniques because the lightning that covers the users body serve to make the lightning unfocused before forming a return path to the current(absorbing it) and it only works for A rank and below techniques but the user can only use lightning techniques after having converted the force of the blow into lightning chakra. It can be done twice with 3 turns in between usage.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: American Robins
    Scroll Owner: EdwardSama
    Other Users who have signed contract: None
    Summoning Boss if existing: King of Robins: Haruko
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Daisuke, Emiko, & Fumiko.
    Description and Background: American robins has a greyish feathers on their head which extends all the way to their backs. The feathers in their heads and tails are slightly darker then the feathers in their backs. Their chest and body is red and they have sharp, yellow beaks. They have a large, round body and a fairly long tail and legs. American robins are common across the continent, in yards, parks, golf courses, and many forests.

    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Haruko) Summoning jutsu: Haruko
    Rank: A
    Range:Short-long range
    Type: Attack
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user bites on his/her thumb, forms two hand seals, and slams their hands with their blood on the ground to summon Haruko. Haruko is the king of all American Robins. He is slightly smaller than the size of gamabunta. He has a longer and sturdier beak then most robins. Haruko has a blue body and a light blue tail. His head and back gray with stripes of white. Because of his large body, he is unable to fly as fast as other flying summons but his body is able to tank jutsus that causes 10 damage or less.
    - Can only be summoned twice per battle.
    - Can perform up to A-rank wind jutsus.
    - Lasts for 4 turns
    - Can only be taught by EdwardSama


    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Daisuke) Summoning jutsu: Daisuke
    Rank: B
    Range: Mid/Long range
    Type: Attack
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user bites on his/her thumb, forms two hand seals, and slams their hands with their blood on the ground to summon Daisuke. Daisuke is the brother of Haruko. He looks like a normal robin but instead of a dark grey head and tail, it is red like its lower body. He is about the same size as Haeuko, just shorter by one feet. Unlike his brother Haruko, Daisuke can fly as fast as an average summon. His wings are sturdy and hard, so if an opponent gets hit by them, it causes them 15 damage.
    - Can only be summoned twice per battle
    - Can perform up to C-rank water jutsus.
    - Lasts for 3 turns
    - Can only be taught by EdwardSama


    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Emiko) Summoning: Emiko
    Rank: B
    Range: Short range
    Type: Attack
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user bites on his/her thumb, forms two hand seals, and slams their hands with their blood on the ground to summon Emiko. Emiko is the last brother of the king of robins. He has a yellow lower body, head, and tail. His head has a few white stripes and his back is completely grey. He is the same size as Daisuke. Emiko is a short-range jutsu user so he flies the fastest between his three brothers. He is capable of flying to his target from a far range quickly so he can attack in a short-range.
    - Can only be summoned twice per battle
    - Can only last 3 rounds
    - Can perform up to C-rank lightning jutsus
    - Can only be taught by EdwardSama



    All these summons can speak english.

    this is my first custom jutsu i submit so feel free to edit, add, or delete anything. thanks~

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    Last edited by Scorps; 08-02-2013 at 05:14 PM.

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