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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Chimeiteki Keiteki) - Fatal Horn
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra: N/a
    Damage: N/a
    Description: Is a hammer with the appearance of a Ram's head as the hammers face and has a chain linked to a spiked metal ball. The head is gold in color, and the 'horns' of the head have a silver color, while the ball's 'shell' is blue with white spikes. The weapon is made of a sturdy, durable metal and has the ability to crush Ice and Earth techniques up to B-rank. The spiked ball is placed/rested on top of the hammer like the Kendama. Originally it belonged to a famous warrior from Sunagakure who participated in the third ninja war and died fighting. When the hammer and ball are together, the weapon is used by bouncing the ball on the Hammer's sides before batting the ball towards the target. The Hammer and ball can be disconnected to perform separate attacks. The hammer's handle has a built-in mechanism that allows it to extend to mid-range to 'Ram' the target and send them backward or to smash them.

    Restrictions
    -Can only be wielded by Fang.
    -Each hammer-based technique counts as a move.
    -The hammer and ball cannot separate and form back on the same turn.
    -Only one hammer technique per turn.
    -The user can separate and connect up to two times.
    -Extending the Hammer can be used up to three times.
    -When separated the Hammer & ball are both A-rank.
    -When the hammer is used to extend and knock the target backward or to smash them it is only C-rank.


    X-Declined-X I still dont see an exact length your weapon could extend to.
    (Chimeiteki Keiteki) - Fatal Horn
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra: N/a
    Damage: N/a
    Description: Is a hammer with the appearance of a Ram's head as the hammers face and has a chain linked to a spiked metal ball. The head is gold in color, and the 'horns' of the head have a silver color, while the ball's 'shell' is blue with white spikes. The weapon is made of a sturdy, durable metal and has the ability to crush Ice and Earth techniques up to B-rank. The spiked ball is placed/rested on top of the hammer like the Kendama. Originally it belonged to a famous warrior from Sunagakure who participated in the third ninja war and died fighting. When the hammer and ball are together, the weapon is used by bouncing the ball on the Hammer's sides before batting the ball towards the target. The Hammer and ball can be disconnected to perform separate attacks. The hammer's handle has a built-in mechanism that allows it to extend to mid-range(6 meters) to 'Ram' the target and send them backward or to smash them.

    Restrictions
    -Can only be wielded by Fang.
    -Each hammer-based technique counts as a move.
    -The hammer and ball cannot separate and form back on the same turn.
    -Only one hammer technique per turn.
    -The user can separate and connect up to two times.
    -Extending the Hammer can be used up to three times.
    -When separated the Hammer & ball are both A-rank.
    -When the hammer is used to extend and knock the target backward or to smash them it is only C-rank.


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    Why does it defend from earth and ice and nothing else? how can each be A-Rank when separated?

    (Kuchiyose: Main Mōru) - Summoning Technique: Mine Mole
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/a
    Description: Mine is the leader of the moles. He is the size of Gamatatsu from part 2 when he had grown and wears a helmet and carries a pickaxe as a weapon. He can perform lightning techniques up to A-rank. He is physically strong enough to smash a man's head to through solid rock and is considered the best digger among the moles. He gets cranky when he is in the middle of something important and is interrupted for assistance when the summoner calls for him.

    Restrictions:
    -Must have signed the mole contract.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -His lightning counts as a move.
    -Lasts for five turns.


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    Summons that can use techniques can only be on the field for 4 turns tops. I don't get the whole smash a mans head through solid rock. Best digger? How does that translate into a battle ability? Also, seems weird that a mole uses lightning but ok...your contract.

    mole technique
    (Bouhatei Kuro-n) - Mole Clone
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: short
    Chakra: 10
    Damage: N/a
    Description: The user weaves two hand-seals, summoning two standard moles. The moles then fuse together to form a clone of the user. They can't perform techniques that the user can do but, can perform standard forms of attack and defense. They serve as a decoy/distraction for their target. When the target is about to strike them, the moles can undo the technique and split, going in opposite directions to launch a counter attack from the opponents sides.

    Restrictions:
    -Only one clone at a time can be created.
    -Must have signed the Mole Contract.

    contract:http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...1#post10018462

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Ryū-Ken Bakuhatsu) Dragon Fist Explosion
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Dragon Fist Explosion is an incredibly powerful attack, this technique is capable of destroying foes much more powerful and much larger then the user himself. The user begins by charging a fair amount of chakra into his hands and forearms the chakra sharpens the user's fist to an extent. The user then attacks by holding his fists out straight at the opponent positioning both arms facing the enemy with his elbows slightly bent, then once his fists are aligned he extends them releasing the chakra as he punches with both hands in unison this is all done in one fluid motion without any stopping. The punches themselves are able to crack the sternum causing pain if it hits the chest. (This movement resembles a Double Push Palm with closed fists) The chakra goes through intense shape manipulation as it forms into a large dragon that can be sent out to Mid range doing a fair amount of damage to the opponent if it hits him. It appears to look similar to a Mythical Chinese Dragon long and slim and it can pierce through the enemy if it hits him right. The real damage comes in when this jutsu is used in short range. The user can use the force of the chakra along with the weight of his own body to to deal a fatal blow to the opponent. If the punches directly hit the opponent the dragon made of chakra blasts through the opponent destroying their body leaving a large wound to the effected area. As the users fist are slightly sharpened by the chakra they also pierce deep into the opponent's body (if used in short range.) Since the basic chakra goes through shape change it is comparable in strength to Elemental jutsu of the same rank.

    Notes:

    -The jutsu can be used while moving and the user doesn't have to stand still to perform.
    -Can only be used twice per battle and must wait 3 turns before using again
    -No Basic Ninjutsu or Basic Genjutsu (this includes Nb gen and advanced Basic Ninjutsu [Non Elemental]) can be used the turn this jutsu is used and no Basic Ninjutsu of A rank or above the next turn.

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    This would need EIG (as its similar to hirudora) or Jyuuken (as its similar to existing techniques ) or to be elemental in nature (which would collide with existing techniques). Still has tons of "grey" areas in the description though.
    (Ryū-Ken Bakuhatsu) Dragon Fist Explosion
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Dragon Fist Explosion is an incredibly powerful attack, this technique is capable of creating fatal wounds to foes much stronger and much larger then the user himself. The user attacks by holding his fists out straight at the opponent positioning both arms facing the enemy with his elbows slightly bent, then once his fists are aligned he extends them with a fast pace strong twisting motion releasing a fair amount of chakra from his fists as he punches with both hands in unison this is all done in one fluid motion without any stopping. The punches themselves are able to crack the sternum causing pain if it hits the chest. (This movement resembles a Double Push Palm with closed fists) The rotational force is so great that it combines with the chakra and through sheer force it forms a long slender dragon (roughly ten meters in length and four meters in diameter) that can be sent out to Mid range doing a fair amount of damage to the opponent if it hits him. It appears to look similar to a Mythical Chinese Dragon long and slim and it can pierce through the enemy if it hits him right piercing through flesh and bone. The real damage comes in when this jutsu is used in short range. The user can use the force of the blow along with the weight of his own body to to deal a fatal strike to the opponent. If the punches directly hit the opponent the dragon will have enough force to blast through the opponent destroying their body leaving a large wound to the effected area. As the users fist are slightly sharpened by the chakra they also pierce deep into the opponent's body (if used in short range.) Since the basic chakra goes through shape manipulation it is comparable in strength to elemental jutsu of the same rank. Unlike hirudora the blow of this jutsu is augmented with chakra, Hirudora is simply put by Might Guy "nothing more than an incredibly fast punch" whereas this jutsu is created through the use of chakra and rotational force which have been both shown to be sufficient in the anime to create jutsu of this caliber. It's been shown in the anime that feats such as this can be accomplished without EIG or any special ability and through sheer force alone.

    Notes:

    -The jutsu can be used while moving and the user doesn't have to stand still to perform.
    -Can only be used twice per battle and must wait 3 turns before using again
    -No Basic Ninjutsu can be used the turn this jutsu is used and no Basic Ninjutsu of A rank or above the next turn.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    For some reason I forgot to link the weapon I'm dropping, the last time. I apologize for that. Here it is and all the techniques tied to it, with links of approvals.

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    Kyōshin-ki | The Resonator
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The Resonator is a legendary shinobi weapon, developed during the establishing era of Otogakure. Since the villagers of Otogakure were known for their ability to control sound and soundwaves they wanted to develop a weapon to complement their talent. As the outcome, The Resonator was made. Regarding its looks, it's not much different than a regular katana. However, since a book shouldn't be judged by its covers, neither should this weapon. Its real power lies within it. The Resonator is actually shallow, having an elongated cavity within it, with a long and thin needle inside it. The cavity is barely a few millimeters in diameter, enough for the needle to be positioned in the middle and still have space to move around. The purpose of the needle is to react to soundwaves. As a soundwave comes across the blade, the needle starts vibrating and tapping on the inside walls of the hole, enhancing the soundwaves and transferring them through the hilt, into the users hand, informing him of the incoming soundwaves. The user, having full mastery of the Sound release, is supposed to know a variety of different frequencies and by the way the needle vibrates, he can distinguish incoming soundwaves, without even hearing them. The weapon is slightly bigger than a regular katana in both thickness and length, in order to make sure that it doesn't lose on sturdiness because of the hole within it. The weapon is made from a special steel called Tamahagane and it consists of several layers of this material, making it very strong and firm. Because of the technique used to make it, it's considered indestructible and it's edge is very hard to dull.

    The resonating needle and its ability are considered passive because they are built into its structure, while the weapon also has an unique ability that the user can activate upon his wish, using the resonating frequency. However, this active ability can only be used twice per battle and it can't be used in consecutive turns. Each of the basic five elements has it's own frequency and when the user uses one of them, they produce a sound, unless it's stated otherwise in the description of the jutsu. As the sound of the jutsu hits the sword and the needle resonates at the certain frequency its vibration creates a, so called reverberation, which simply requires the user to swing the sword in order to release the soundwave and cast a weak genjutsu onto the opponent. The swing should be performed immediately after or in conjunction with the previous jutsu in order to maximize its effectiveness. The genjutsu would be B ranked and simple and straightforward. In the genjutsu, the user would have a certain amount of freedom in manipulating the opponents senses (hearing and vision) in order to change the way he perceives the incoming jutsu. He could make the jutsu change its form, split, vanish, decrease or increase in size and even change its trajectory. Of course, all effects are bound to the rules of Narutoverse and are required to be as realistic as possible, again concentrating on its effectiveness.
    Note: The genjutsu counts as one of the users moves per turn
    Note: Requires sound mastery to be used effectively
    Note: Owned by McRazor



    X-Declined-X
    -I know what tamahagane is... but just so you know, literally it means Ball Steel or Steel balls >_>
    -No Freeform sound illusions ^^ think up something more specific.
    Kyōshin-ki | The Resonator
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The Resonator is a legendary shinobi weapon, developed during the establishing era of Otogakure. Since the villagers of Otogakure were known for their ability to control sound and soundwaves they wanted to develop a weapon to complement their talent. As the outcome, The Resonator was made. Regarding its looks, it's not much different than a regular katana. However, since a book shouldn't be judged by its covers, neither should this weapon. Its real power lies within it. The Resonator is actually shallow, having an elongated cavity within it, with a long and thin needle inside it. The cavity is barely a few millimeters in diameter, enough for the needle to be positioned in the middle and still have space to move around. The purpose of the needle is to react to soundwaves. As a soundwave comes across the blade, the needle starts vibrating and tapping on the inside walls of the hole, enhancing the soundwaves and transferring them through the hilt, into the users hand, informing him of the incoming soundwaves. The user, having full mastery of the Sound release, is supposed to know a variety of different frequencies and by the way the needle vibrates, he can distinguish incoming soundwaves, without even hearing them. The weapon is slightly bigger than a regular katana in both thickness and length, in order to make sure that it doesn't lose on sturdiness because of the hole within it. The weapon is made from a special steel called Tamahagane and it consists of several layers of this material, making it very strong and firm. Because of the technique used to make it, it's considered indestructible and it's edge is very hard to dull.

    The resonating needle and its ability are considered passive because they are built into its structure, while the weapon also has an unique ability that the user can activate upon his wish, using the resonating frequency. However, this active ability can only be used twice per battle and it can't be used in consecutive turns. Each of the basic five elements has it's own frequency and when the user uses one of them, they produce a sound, unless it's stated otherwise in the description of the jutsu. As the sound of the jutsu hits the sword and the needle resonates at the certain frequency its vibration creates a, so called reverberation, which simply requires the user to swing the sword in order to release the soundwave and cast a weak genjutsu onto the opponent. The swing should be performed immediately after or in conjunction with the previous jutsu in order to maximize its effectiveness. The genjutsu would be B ranked and simple and straightforward. In the genjutsu, the user would change the way the opponent perceives the incoming jutsu. He could make the jutsu change its trajectory and make it appear as if the jutsu if following an arc or such. Since it's an audiovisual genjutsu, the sound would correspond the visual trajectory of the jutsu. Of course, all effects are bound to the rules of Narutoverse and are required to be as realistic as possible, again concentrating on its effectiveness.
    Note: The genjutsu counts as one of the users moves per turn and can only be used 3 times
    Note: Requires sound mastery to be used effectively
    Note: Owned by McRazor



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    Ototon/Genjutsu: Furasshu-Gurō | Sound/Illusionary Arts: Flash-Taunt
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Flash-taunt is a close combat, sound based genjutsu. It's special because of its characteristic to be triggered rather quickly, while in close, hand to hand combat. To trigger the genjutsu, the user will focus an amount of sound chakra into his bladed weapon or his limbs and engage into a fight. The moment his weapon or limbs collide with his opponent's, they would release the usual sound (clash of metal weapons or a dull thump of limbs) with infused sound chakra, causing the soundwave to spread and trick the opponent into a genjutsu where the user flashes from his previous position, appearing right behind the opponent, with a sharp kunai pointed at his neck, aiming at his spine. In the illusion, depending on the users intention, he chooses where to stab his kunai (between the C3 and C7, cervical vertebrae), causing various effects. In general, they are pretty much all alike, causing paralysis or limited torso and hand movements, resulting in the opponent being immobilized while, in reality, the user is left to deal the finishing blow.
    Stab effects: C3: Typically results in loss of diaphragm function, necessitating the use of a ventilator for breathing.
    C4: Results in significant loss of function at the biceps and shoulders.
    C5: Results in potential loss of function at the biceps and shoulders, and complete loss of function at the wrists and hands.
    C6: Results in limited wrist control, and complete loss of hand function.
    C7: Results in lack of dexterity in the hands and fingers, but allows for limited use of arms.
    Note: Usable only once per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this

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    -Declined- I like it, but it's a bit OP, specially because it's used in short range during a hand to hand fight, so you have two options, either make it's activation as something that's easily known to be tricky "hence why they would know it's a genjutsu" or lower the technique's abilities, and by abilities i mean effects and rank.
    Ototon/Genjutsu: Furasshu-Gurō | Sound/Illusionary Arts: Flash-Taunt
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Flash-taunt is a close combat, sound based genjutsu. It's special because of its characteristic to be triggered rather quickly, while in close, hand to hand combat. To trigger the genjutsu, the user will focus an amount of sound chakra into his bladed weapon or his limbs and engage into a fight. The moment his weapon or limbs collide with his opponent's, they would release the usual sound (clash of metal weapons or a dull thump of limbs) with infused sound chakra, causing the soundwave to spread and trick the opponent into a genjutsu where the user flashes from his previous position, appearing right behind the opponent, with a sharp kunai pointed at his neck, aiming at his spine. In the illusion the user stabs his kunai in the opponents neck, causing pain and slight momentary loss of limb function. Off course the illusion is momentary and it will happen at the speed a ninja would be otherwise able to perform the same movement in reality. However, because it masks the users real presence, its exceedingly useful to deliver severe blows unnoticed.
    Note: Usable only twice per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this
    Note: Cannot use any other technique while using this nor can the opponent be attacked with Ninjutsu when he is caught in the illusion


    Fuuinjutsu: Mizu No Kami No Shirushi | Sealing Arts: Seal of the Water God
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The seal of the Water God is a special seal developed for the purpose to aid the user in tough situations. The seal itself is a circle of kanji surrounding the kanji for "Divine" in the middle. The user himself is the seal and can manifest it in any part of his body he wishes. The seal only works against Water techniques and is a very good defense against them. The seal activates and draws in any nearby water technique into himself, storing both the water and the chakra it contained inside of it. The seal can then serve multiple purposes:
    -Reverence of God: The user will use the sealed, chakra infused, water to boost the damage of another water technique. Once he has absorbed an enemy technique, he does the handseals or rituals, needed for his own technique and, instead of its normal release, releases the technique from the seal itself (generally manifesting it in his hands). The end result is the water technique that the user performed with the addition of damage of the technique he had absorbed. The damage added is equal to the chakra points absorbed. Can be used 2 times.
    -Divine Will: The user will use the sealed, chakra infused, water to combo with another elemental technique. Once he has absorbed an enemy technique he does the handseals or rituals needed for his own technique and, instead of its normal release, releases the technique from the seal itself (generally manifesting it in his hands). The end result is an elemental combo of both water and the element of the technique he performed. The rank of the combo is equal to rank of the elemental technique used although becoming a dual elemental technique. Can be used 2 times.
    -Touch of Drought: The user will manifest the seal in both his hands and absorb any nearby moisture or water into the seal in a mere moment. This can be used to negate weather patterns such as clouds or mist but also to make it harder to breathe or to drain water sources. This can also be used to, upon touching an enemy, induce a temporary dehydration to the enemy, making him stumble and lose focus as well as stamina and strength, as he feels dizzy and weak. The effects last one turn. Can be used 2 times.
    Note: Absorbing a technique counts as a move and can only be done 3 times. Cannot absorb more than one at a time.
    Note: The seal can be combined with techniques that can logically be combined with a "water burst" from his body, as its follows logic and reasoning
    Note: The seal can only be used max 3 times and the effects used depend on the user but neither can be used more than 2 times
    Note: The user must wait a turn before using it again
    Note: The seal has to be stated in the biography
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this

    Fuuinjutsu training - http://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=409219

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Nishin - Duplicity
    Type:
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    Rank: S Rank
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Duplicity is a whip manufactured in a time of war. It's said to be the strongest whip ever to be created, this is mainly due to the unknown material that it is made from. The whip is thicker and denser that all common whips, this was no design flaw, it was intentional. From the thickness the whips abilities derive. Duplicity can split into 2 whips when the user wills it too. The 2 whips that emerge are as thick and dense as normal whips. With the 2 whips the wielder can attack multiple opponents simultaneously. The user can rejoin the 2 whips into one through a button located at the top of the handle, the button would trigger a mechanism that causes the whip to stick together. From the ability of separating into 2 whips another one was discovered. The user can split Duplicity in selective areas, this means that the user can for example separate Duplicity in middle, creating a hole, after that he can capture the enemy in the hole, then through pressing the button the hole will close in in an attempt to join the whip, the hole would choke the enemy if it was around the neck area, or crush bones, or tie the enemy up. It all depends on the usage. The other ability is that the tip of the whip can become very sharp, it would take the form of a tip of a sword. This sharpness introduces a new danger to opponents, other than the pain from the whipping they get when whipped, they will get stabbed by the tip of the whip.
    Notes & Restrictions:
    -The ability to cause the tip to become sharp counts towards the three jutsu limit, and can only be used 4X. It can be maintained for 1 turn for a additional chakra cost of 15.
    - Separating the whip does count towards the three Jutsu limit, but joining it does not.
    -While joined Duplicity is as thick as 2 whips, hence why when separated it as thick as one.
    -Duplicity when joined is capable of withstanding 1 S rank attacks without getting cut, burned, frozen, etc, when split each one can withstand 1 A ranks.
    -The handle is indestructible, the button is only pushable when the user's chakra is infused.
    -The whip's length is about 3 meters

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Doton: Ka Mure) - Earth Release: Mosquito Swarm
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 20 (-10 per turn)
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user performs a single hand seal and send his chakra in the earth short to mid range from him. Then he creates a cloud of several little mosquitos from that earth, what he can use for attack. These mosquitos are as big as the nails on the hands and look like the male mosquitos except their mouth, what was replaced with a long and thin needle made from earth. The mosquitos are using this needle to attack the opponent, but due to their small size they only deal moderate damage. However to make up for the less damage, just like with normal needles, the user can direct the mosquitos to attack certain points on the opponent with a pinpoint accuracy. With that he can deal damage that can be lethal to the opponent. To increase the usefulness of this tech, every mosquito is extremely light so that they can fly using their wings or walk on the ground or solid surfaces if needed. When flying, they have the speed of a normal living mosquito, but on ground they are slow. Each mosquito can be controlled individually or the user can control the whole cloud, depending on the number and the user's intentions. Despite their size, just like normal mosquitos, they are easily visible and produce a faint and annoying sound as they fly around.
    - the cloud of mosquitos can remain on the battlefield for 2 turns
    - if a mosquito hits it's target, it will stick to it until get destroyed or get a new command
    - can only be taught by Frozenstein

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    (Ninjutsu: Yoroi Kussetsu) - Ninja Arts: Armor Bending
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user makes a swinging motion with his arm or hand and send chakra inside the opponent's clothing. He then changes the structure of it, make it stronger and finally manipulate it. This manipulation can be made in 2 ways. He can make the clothing to completely wrap around the opponent and crush him, or wrap around in certain parts like arms, legs, upper/lower body, etc. Using either means to crush the opponent, the technique has the same power. It can squeeze and crush the opponent really fast, break his bones and deal internal damage to him. This technique can be used not only on regular clothes, but armors and generally everything that is worn on the body.
    - wrapping happens extremely fast and when it start to squeeze the opponent, it can force him to release his grasp on weapons or cancel techniques that needs direct control
    - ninjas with extreme strength such as Tsunade or Raikage may break out from the tech
    - can only be used 3 times per battle
    - can only be taught by Frozenstein

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    I like the concept. A lot. Good thinking. Though I need this to be of lower rank (B-Rank) and require either a sequence of 3 handseals (at least) or direct physical contact to happen. I also need you to put a note saying that Custom Weapons cannot be affected by this; only generic, non specific pieces of clothes. Good job.


    How the jutsu looks like:
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    (Raiton: Dendou Hishou) - Electric Flight
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30 (+5 per turn)
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user performs 2 hand seals and start to continually emit a high amount of lightning chakra from his whole body. Once the chakra is released, the user uses his chakra to electroduce (is that a word? lol) objects/areas in his vicinity. He then change the charge of his lightning chakra he emits and use the previously electroduced objects/areas to pull himself toward them. However while he is pulling himself, the user continually redirects his lightning chakra toward new objects/areas and start the process again, resulting in a continuous movement. When the lightning reaches an area/object/technique that has earth chakra in it, that chakra gets nullified and if that was an earth technique, it gets destroyed too. If the earth chakra in the targeted area/object is S-rank or higher, it gets destroyed/nullified but the technique stops too. The user while using this jutsu can raise himself in the air, making it possible to move around areas (like a swamp) where normally it wouldn't be possible. The lightning also surrounds the user which shocks everything that gets in contact with it.
    - the user can only affect objects/areas in a short range radius, but the user can travel long ranges with it
    - due to the user has to emit lightning chakra continually, he can only use lightning techs while this active
    - can only be used 3 times per battle
    - effect lasts 3 turns or until destroyed/canceled
    - can only be taught by Frozenstein

    How the jutsu looks like:


    X-Declined-X Two things:
    -How does it work over the swamp technique when contact with earth chakra cancels the technique?
    -You cannot continuously change charges to keep yourself afloat. You get once chance to charge the nearby structure and you move within the vicinity of these structure for set limit of turns. You could even do this over the ground and move long distance in a straight line and add some speed to this technique.
    (Raiton: Dendou Hishou) - Electric Flight
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30 (+5 per turn)
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user performs 2 hand seals and start to continually emit a high amount of lightning chakra from his whole body. Once the chakra is released, the user uses his chakra to electroduce objects/areas in his vicinity (short range). He then change the charge of his lightning chakra he emits and use the previously electroduced objects/areas to float/move himself around them in a 10 meters radius. However if the user wishes, he can move himself to long range in a straight line over a flat area, but due to the longer distance the technique cancels itself afterward. When the lightning reaches an area/object/technique that has earth chakra in it, that chakra gets nullified and if that was an earth technique, it gets destroyed too. If the earth chakra in the targeted area/object is S-rank or higher, it gets destroyed/nullified, but the technique stops too. The user while using this jutsu can raise himself in the air, making it possible to move around areas (like a swamp) where normally it wouldn't be possible. If the user uses this tech on Swamp of the Underworld, he can nullify the chakra in the area the lightning hit and stop the swamp to keep forming. With that he creates a "safe zone" what he can use as the base for his technique. However the technique can't turn the ground back to solid earth. The lightning also surrounds the user which shocks everything that gets in contact with it.
    - the user can only affect objects/areas in a short range radius and move around in a 10 meters radius around that object/area
    - user can move around with 1.5x of his top running speed, but special boosts such as weights training or gate openings do not count
    - due to the user has to emit lightning chakra continually, he can only use lightning techs while this active
    - can only be used 3 times per battle
    - effect lasts 3 turns or until destroyed/canceled
    - can only be taught by Frozenstein

    How the jutsu looks like:


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    Sorry but this can't be approved. DNR.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Doton: Yakkai na Chikyū Sōsa | Earth Release: Thorny Earth Manipulation
    Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid (Created at Short Range)
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: Using this technique, the user will insert their earth chakra up to 5 meters on all sides, allowing them to create up to ten 15 meter long and .5 meters thick blackish thorn vines made out of earth anywhere within short range. The vine's texture and structure allows it to bend and move around agilely, and wrap around opponents. The thorns on the vines are extremely sharp and can pierce through flesh fairly easily. Not only can they used for attack, but it can be used to create a defense if needed
    ~The veins are created Short-range from the user with a Mid-range reach
    ~ Can only be used 4 times per battle
    ~Thorns can stay active on the field max 2 turns. After those 2 turns they will crumble into dust
    ~Requires a 2 turn cooldown
    (The dust canot be used to blind,attack, or harm an opponent)
    ~Resubmitting~
    Doton: Yakkai na Chikyū Sōsa | Earth Release: Thorny Earth Manipulation
    Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid (Created at Short Range)
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: Using this technique, the user will insert their earth chakra up to 5 meters on all sides, allowing them to create up to six 15 meter long and .5 meters thick blackish thorn vines made out of earth anywhere within short range. The vine's texture and structure allows it to bend and move around agiley, and wrap around opponents. The thorns on the vines are extremely sharp and can pierce through flesh fairly easily. Not only can they used for attack, but it can be used to create a defense if needed
    ~The veins are created Short-range from the user with a Mid-range reach
    ~ Can only be used 4 times per battle
    ~Thorns can stay active on the field max 2 turns. After those 2 turns they will crumble into dust
    ~Requires a 2 turn cooldown

    Removed something about dust >__> All my cj were declined for being banned T_T

    Kenjutsu: Getsuga Tenshō | Sword Arts: Moon Fang Heaven-Piercer
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Getsuga Tenshō is the technique known to be brighter than the heavens. To perform this technique, the user will force chakra out of his body onto his sword. The chakra will be manipulated to emit a very bright light and swirls around the sword. The user will then simply swing his blade, shaping the chakra into a large crescent wave. This however is done with a tremendous amount of power behind it, capable of destroying a large rock formation. The wave emits a bright, concentrated and concussive explosion once it hits an opponent. Its explodes in the opponents direction, the bright light is even more powerful than a point-blank range flash bomb, it will blind the opponent for 1 turn and take 1 more turn for their vision to revert completely back to normal to normal. It would be blurry during those turns
    -Can only be used 2 times per battle
    -No S ranks in the same turn
    -No S rank kenjutsu in the next turn
    -Can only be taught by Cursed Prince


    Kenjutsu: Getsuga Tenshō Tenazukeru | Sword Arts: Moon Fang Heaven-Piercer Tamed
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Getsuga Tenshō Tenazukeru is the devil's Getsuga, known to obliterate. The user will force chakra out of his body into his sword, and concentrate it around his sword. The chakra is black with a reddish outline and is compressed onto the sword. Once it strikes an object, it will release an incinerating explosion. This explosion is concentrated and directed fully towards the opponent. the explosion is capable of incinerating an opponent entirely.
    -Can only be used 2 times per battle
    -No S ranks in the same turn
    -No S rank kenjutsu in the next turn


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    For editting the quote you provided. Next time Its a ban from the thread for 2 cycles.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Genjutsu: Obsessive–compulsive Inception) - Illusionay Arts: Obsessive–compulsive Inception (No jap name or similar found)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User makes 2 handseals (Ram+Boar) and puts the enemy in this simple but strong illusion, which is similar to a disorder named "Obsessive–compulsive Disorder" in which the person suffering from the disorder cannot stop doing a particular thing, for example washing their hands. In this genjutsu, user fiddles with the opponent's brain in such a way that his mind tells him to repeat a particular action again and again. This include only minor physical actions like moving a part of the body. Things like performing a jutsu cannot be caused to be repeated, as it requires chakra focusing which cannot be fiddled using this technique.
    Note: -A strong enough mind can break through this genjutsu (Sannin Rank or above) without using any genjutsu breaking means (like kai or stabbing), once they realize they are in this gen.
    -Lasts 3 turns if not handled.
    -User can stop the technique whenever he wishes to.
    -Usable 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.

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    This is not a Genjutsu... DNR.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Korra bio has Rain Release http://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=383852

    (Ameton: Ame No Bakuhatsu) - Rain Release: Rain Explosion
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long (For Activation) Short (for the explosion)
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will do the snake sign and channel their chakra into rain drops in a focus point of an area. The user send a pulse of chakra to have the rain drop explode dealing damage to the opponent. The user must time when to have the rain explode or else they might mess up and have them explode to late. The trigger for the jutsu can be made from any location but the explosion can only go up to 3 feet of the rain drop location.
    Note: Usable 3 times a match
    Note: Must be taught by Korra
    Note: Must know Rain Release

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     Declined 
    DNR. Exists in more than one form.


    (Suiton: Fenikkusu no shinu wa ishi) Water Release: Phoenix's Dying Will
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: This jutsu is one of the most powerful water jutsus created. The user will either focus their water chakra into the sky or use existing rain to start gathering to a focus point of the user's choosing. When enough rain or chakra is gather the user will create a giant water phoenix which is 3/4 of the size of Gambunta. The user will then command the phoenix to fly up into high into the sky and come crashing down into the ground. This will result in a huge shock wave of water that spreads in a complete circle form the point hitting. Because the user is in the area of they will get hit from the jutsu if they do not find a way to avoid it.
    Note: Usable Once
    Note: Takes two turns to form unless Rain is presented.
    Note: The user will die from the hit of blast unless they find a way to avoid it. If they do succeeded in avoiding it then the will not be able to use water jutsus for 5 turns while they are restricted to A rank jutsus for 2 turns.

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     Declined 
    Water projectiles shaped like birds (and if memory serves me right, phoenixes) already exist. DNR.


    Quote Originally Posted by Kōrra View Post
    Resubmitting Grim Reaper's Will but changing the concept a little bit and the name
    Link to Reaper Scythe Arts Approval http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...8&postcount=71

    (Sishen Liandao Yishu: Shinigami no Gifuto) Reaper Scythe Arts: The Grim Reaper's Gift
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Though it was develop form the elemental infusion, Korra was able to intensify the jutsu to create scythes made out of an elemental themselves. These element scythes are able to cut sharper than normal scythes. When using chakra the chakra scythes each have different effects. Theses scythes are also the length of normal scythes.
    Katon: The scythe is made up of complete fire and when in contact with an opponent can produce a burning effect upon contact. The user is unaffected by the fire by covering their body in a layer of chakra to protect themselves.
    Suiton: The scythe is made up water, making the scythe more flexible and can increase the length up to 3 feet. When hit by this scythe it causes irregular breathing to an opponent.
    Raiton: The chakra made up of complete lightning making the scythe’s penetration greater and causes a numbing effect upon impact. User creates a protective layer of chakra to protect them.
    Doton: The scythe made up of rocks which can have its weight either increased (3 times as much) or decreased (3 times as much) to either increase impact or speed, depending on the situation (only one weight change per use, meaning either use this infusion for more weight or less with each use) The scythe can also cause broken bones when being hit by.
    Futon: The blade is made up of pure concreted wind increasing having an increased cutting power than normal scythes.
    Note: Usable 3 time a match
    Note: Must know Reaper Scythe Arts and must be taught by ~Korra~
    Note: Can only have one infusion active. With earth infusion, each changing of weight counts as a use.
    Note: The user can create either 1 or 2 scythes at a time but if creating two the scythes are the same element. If the user creates 1 but then wants to create another right after it still counts as another use.

    X-Pending-X Link this to Adachi, let him check to see if you've made the changes he wanted.

    Link to my Korra bio who has Snakes http://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=383852

    (Sunēku no shūen ) -Snake's Demise
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Range: Short- Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: The user will slam their hand on the ground that summon two snakes (the size of a normal anaconda) that come out of the ground underneath the opponent and wraps around them. The two snakes will then bite the opponent then will send a contentious pulse of lightning chakra that will make the opponent numb and finally paralyze them.
    Note: The paralyzing effect kicks in after 1 turn but the numbing effect will start right away.
    Note: The snakes must be biting the opponent to keep the effects lasting. If the opponent breaks free the effects wear out in 2 turns.
    Note: Must be able to summon snakes.
    Note: Usable 4 time a match.
    Note: Must be taught by Korra

    X-Declined-X Elemental snakes? O_o why not just use a paralysing venom or something?
    Resubmitting

    (Sunēku no shūen ) -Snake's Demise
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Range: Short- Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: The user will slam their hand on the ground that summon two snakes (the size of a normal anaconda) that come out of the ground underneath the opponent and wraps around them. The two snakes will then bite the opponent then will inject a paralyzing venom that will make the opponent numb and finally paralyze them.
    Note: The paralyzing effect kicks in after 1 turn but the numbing effect will start right away.
    Note: The snakes must be biting the opponent to keep the effects lasting. If the opponent breaks free the effects wear out in 2 turns.
    Note: Must be able to summon snakes.
    Note: Usable 4 time a match.
    Note: Must be taught by Korra

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    Needs more hand seals and needs to be clearly noted by the enemy since I don't see how you can summon something INSIDE the earth...
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by General. View Post
    (Genjutsu :Ranpu kibou) Illusionary Arts: Light Trickery
    Type: Supplementary*
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/a
    Description: This is a special type of genjutsu as it requires a holster with a sword in it. The User will slowly pull out their sword from their holster in their opponents line of sight, thus inducing the opponent in the genjutsu. As the sword is being drawn out, the opponent will see a very bright blinding light coming from the sword as its coming out the sword holster, temporarily blinding the opponent for, As the opponent is blind, the user will feel a sharp stab through their chest from the back. As the opponent gets stabbed from the back the blinding light will go down, and the opponent will then not see the user in front of them but in the back. Making it seem like the user is the one that stabbed them from the back. In reality the opponent simply falls to the ground from shock once stabbed in the genjutsu. Thus giving the user a chance to attack.




    Note: Can Use Twice
    Note: Cant Use A Rank Gen or above the next turn after use
    Note: Must carry a holster with a sword in it

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    Needs a trigger in the form of Handdseals or some gesture like the confrontation handseal as you take the sword from the holster. Besides, its at best a B-Rank genjutsu. Also you wrote that the user is stabbed from the back...might wanna reword that unless you want to damage yourself with your own genjutsu...>_>
    (Genjutsu :Ranpu kibou) Illusionary Arts: Light Trickery
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/a
    Description: This is a special type of genjutsu as it requires a holster with a sword in it. The User will slowly pull out their sword from their holster in their opponents line of sightand speak the words "Be Blinded" Those words are the trigger for the jutsu, thus inducing the opponent in the genjutsu. As the sword is being drawn out, the opponent will see a very bright blinding light coming from the sword as its coming out the sword holster, temporarily blinding the opponent for, As the opponent is blind, the oppenent will feel a sharp stab through their chest from the back. As the opponent gets stabbed from the back the blinding light will go down, and the opponent will then not see the user in front of them but in the back. Making it seem like the user is the one that stabbed them from the back. In reality the opponent simply falls to the ground from shock once stabbed in the genjutsu. Thus giving the user a chance to attack.

    Note: Can Use Twice
    Note: Must carry a holster with a sword in it


    (Katon:Atsusa takadai) Fire Style: Heat Elevation
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40 (-20 each turn active)
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will do create a small fireball in their hand and throw it into the sky, Once done, They will do a set of 5 handseals and slam their hands on the ground. By doing this they channel large amounts of fire chakra into the ground that violently erupts from 6 corners all around the battle field. The fire then pours into the small fireball that was shot into the air early, as the small fireball acting like an magnet attracting the fire thats pouring out of the ground into the air. The fire ball is above the user and this jutsu takes time. After a few seconds, the fireball above the user head will be 10meters large and wide. Once the fireball is done forming, the user will do 2 handseals and fire will then start shooting out of the large fireball in large streams. The large fireball can only shoot out a large stream of fire once pr battle, and this jutsu takes 2 of the user 3 slots due to the huge scale and time preparation.
    -Can only use once
    -Only stay on the field for 3 turns max
    -Each time a stream of fire is dispersed from the fireball it counts as a user turn
    -Cant Use fire at all while this jutsu is in play

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    All DNR. You are hereby banned from this thread until Caliburn says otherwise. You knew very well you couldn't submit customs.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Batoidea: Blitz Krieg)- Summoning: Batoidea: Blitz Krieg
    Type: Summon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Blitz Krieg is one of the three boss summons of the Ray Contract. Blitz Krieg specialises in lightning, and has a pectoral fin spin of 7 meters, while being 5 meters long from head to tail base. (Not including tail length.) Blitz Krieg, upon being summoned, passively releases dark purple clouds of lightning that settle over the battlefield, at a minimum height of two meters above head height. The clouds greatly reduce lightning, the battlefield only illuminated by the small non hindering static bolts that course throughout the airborne clouds. The true use of the clouds is that they attract the lightning techniques of the opponent, weakening them by one rank as they store some of the oppositions electrical charge within them. Krieg is then capable of taking hold of the stored electrical energy, effectively utilizing the clouds as an electrical source as he uses his chakra to empower the currents, allowing for the release of Lightning attacks from anywhere within the clouds. Fortunately for the enemy, the enhancement and manipulation of the electrical essence within the artificial clouds isn’t necessarily discreet, as a distinct crackling noise can be heard echoing in the nearby vicinity. Utilizing this method, Krieg can release B, A and S rank bolts, waves, blades, blasts and walls of lightning, either through use of the clouds, or from his body. When Krieg disappears, he is capable of causing the lightning clouds to disperse in a electrostatic discharge which empowers any Lightning jutsu in play by +20, whether it be the users or the opponents.

    Note:
    - Krieg can only be summoned once per battle.
    - Krieg stays on the field for four turns.
    - Krieg can is limited to creating three B ranked lighting attacks, two A rank lightning attacks, and two S rank lightning attacks, overall Krieg can only use five lightning attacks per battle, all of which naturally count as a jutsu.
    - Krieg uses both passive and active electroreception, his passive electrolocation spanning out for miles through all mediums, while his active electrolocation spans out only to short range around him.

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    I like it but if the clouds are the source of this ability, how can he create lightning from his body? I need a note saying he can't use lightning techniques himself. Perhaps add a resistance to electrical currents and a note saying it can fly. I don't like the sensing part though. Mainly because you lack the medium while he is in the air. Also, I suggest saying that for some aspect of the ability, the clouds are summoned with him and not released by him. Reason is that clouds are bound to two things in our RP: Storm Release and Cloud Release (the CE). Best option here is to say the clouds come with him to the field and stay due to the electrical currents inside them and fueled by him and while he is in play, they can only be countered by using X-Rank Wind technique of enough scale. Otherwise they reform. Also note that these blasts of lightning can be defended from and will not be as fast as Kirin...just reminding you

    Batoidea Jutsu: Yōshanai Arashi | Batoidea Arts: The Unrelenting Swarm
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: A technique where by drawing blood, the user summons a fleet of rays around the opponent. The rays rapidly swirl around the opponent, releasing their chakra as they do so. The chakra serves to firstly augment their body, and secondly allows the ray to have a level of control over how air resistance affects them, allowing for faster and more efficient flying. The released chakra has an aesthetically pleasing visual representation of a bright, slightly translucent, fluorescent turquoise or aqua marine glowing trail of sorts. The mass release of chakra manipulated in the same way in unison by all of the circling rays give rise to the third effect, the released chakra and movements of Rays effectively whipping up a tornado of air currents and chakra around the enemy, buffeting them and dealing oppressive blunt damage. Meanwhile the Rays are free to ravage the enemies body as they wish, either eating them alive of stinging them to a fatal point, or merely using their enhanced flight to hone their bodies into blade like weapons, slicing into the enemies sides.

    Note:
    - If used on/underwater a whirlpool will form, alongside this technique gaining a +20 boost in power.
    - Can only be used 3x
    - No Ray Jutsu above A rank for the rest of the turn
    - Can only be used by a Signer, or by a Ray. A ray can summon these rays through the simple use of a high pitched call.

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    Ok, how long to they last in the field? How big are they? how many do you summon? Its a summoning technique where you're summoning animals...you need to clarify these things.


    Quote Originally Posted by Baldy.. View Post
    Link to Contract

    Batoidea Jutsu: Kakuu Heki | Batoidea Arts: Electrostatic Surge
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user draws blood and then continues to slides the blood across their summoning tattoo so as to summon eight identical rays around the opponent in a octogonal formation. These Rays specialize in an immensely potent and powerful variation of Active Electrolocation, which produces a field that directly interferes with the opponents nerves. Shinobi two ranks below the user will find performing even hand seals to be an immensely difficult task, while those of equal or higher rank will suffer from a state of slowed movement, reduced reaction times and sluggish bodily movements. On being summoned, these rays continually dart and whiz around the opponent, following them if need be. The rapid sometimes orbital movements of the rays causes for countless minute non-damaging sparks of electricity to materialize over the opponent's body, giving them a strong electrostatic charge which is oppositely charged to that of ordinary lightning. As a result, whilst the opponent is surrounded by the rays, raiton jutsu become incredibly difficult to dodge and Raiton jutsu used by the opponent often suffer from the habit of discharging back into the opponents body, shocking them, or perhaps doing worse depending on the nature and power of the technique. Due their speed, these rays can be incredibly difficult to escape from. Alternatively, the user can simply summon the Rays so as to ‘sniff’ out and surround the opponent, making them exceptionally useful for finding hidden enemies due their abilities.

    Note:
    - These Rays disappear when either killed, or three turns pass.
    - Each time a ray is killed the technique becomes weaker. Once at least five of these Rays are killed the technique ends.
    - Can only be used twice per battle
    - No Ray jutsu can be performed by the user for the rest of the turn.
    - A ray can summon these Rays simply through the use of chakra and a high pitched call.
    - Must have signed the Ray Contract

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    Declined
    Overpowered.
    Link to Contract

    Batoidea Jutsu: Kakuu Heki | Batoidea Arts: Electrostatic Surge
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user draws blood and then continues to slides the blood across their summoning tattoo so as to summon five identical rays around the opponent in a pentagonal formation. These Rays specialize in an immensely potent and powerful variation of Active Electrolocation, which produces a field that directly interferes with the opponents nerves. Shinobi two ranks below the user will find performing even hand seals to be an immensely difficult task, while those of equal or higher rank will suffer from a state of slowed movement, and sluggish bodily control. The field doesn’t affect the enemies reaction times, as they can still think and strategize as normal, and thus perform handseal-less jutsu with only a slight deficit in initiation speed. However it does affect motor skills and function, making movements, reflexes and the like slower and more difficult. On being summoned, these rays continually dart and whiz around the opponent, following them if need be. The rapid sometimes orbital movements of the rays causes for countless minute non-damaging sparks of electricity to materialize over the opponent's body, giving them a strong electrostatic charge which is oppositely charged to that of ordinary lightning. As a result, whilst the opponent is surrounded by the rays, raiton jutsu become incredibly difficult to dodge and Raiton jutsu used by the opponent often suffer from the habit of discharging back into the opponents body, shocking them, or perhaps doing worse depending on the nature and power of the technique. (Unfocused bursts would be heavily affected, while immensely focused, directed and projectile like lightning techniques would work almost as normal; Eg Spear of Darkness) Due their speed, these rays can be incredibly difficult to escape from. Alternatively, the user can simply summon the Rays so as to ‘sniff’ out and surround the opponent, making them exceptionally useful for finding hidden enemies due their abilities.

    Note:
    - These Rays disappear when either killed, or three turns pass.
    - Each time a ray is killed the technique becomes weaker. Once at least three of these Rays are killed the technique ends.
    - Can only be used twice per battle
    - No Ray jutsu can be performed by the user for the rest of the turn.
    - A ray can summon these Rays simply through the use of chakra and a high pitched call.
    - Must have signed the Ray Contract

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Raiton:Denki kōzan fīrudo (Lightning Release: Electric Mine Field)
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: After performing the hand seals snake>rooster>upside down Tiger>Ram>Monkey and slams their hands on the ground releasing a surge of electricity that flairs out under the surrounding top soil, electrifying the surrounding landscape. If the users opponent comes within the jutsus range a large surge of electricity shoots up from the ground electrocuting them on the spot.
    ~Note: Last for two turns
    ~Note: Can only be performed by those taught by The Alchemist

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    Note: For the love of god don't bold the entire submission next time, it's annoying to read through.
    Resubmitting
    Denki Kozan Firudo (Lightning Release: Electric Mine Field)
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: After performing the hand seals snake>rooster>upside down Tiger>Ram>Monkey and slams their hands on the ground releasing a surge of electricity that flairs out under the surrounding top soil, electrifying the surrounding landscape. If the users opponent comes within the jutsus range a large surge of electricity shoots up from the ground electrocuting them on the spot.
    ~Note: Last one full turn
    ~Note: Can only be performed by those taught by The Alchemist

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    Exists. DNR.

    Kuchiyose no Jutsu- Eisern Drossel ( Summoning Technique-Eisern Drossel)
    Type: CW
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: Eisern Drossel is a hooped blade with three long curved outer blades given to Tira by her beloved Lord Orochimaru while she was under his tutelage. Like all summonings, Eisern Drossel requires blood from the user. What is unique about this summoning is that Tira actually uses a greater amount of blood and draws a circle where she desires Eisern Drossel to appear ( mainly because she is a masochist and enjoys the sight of her own blood). After doing the required hand seals and slamming her palm on the ground Eisern Drossel appears where the circle was drawn. She then can use it like a holla hoop making her attacks with said weapon both ferocious as well as constructing a defense around herself.
    ~Note: Can only be summoned by Tira

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    uh? This doesn't even make sense...wth is this? A weapon...ok and what weapon is it? why is it labelled as a summon? no range? but damage and chakra cost? Tira? who is tira? Same question as initially...Uh??

    Ninpou:Yūwaku suru on'na no shi no dansu dansu (Ninja Art: Dance of Death-Dance of the Seductress)
    Type:Attack/Defense
    Rank:B
    Range: Short
    Chakra:20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user concentrates their chakra in an even flow within their body and using Eiserne Drossel like a hoola hoop begin to perform a dance of sensual deadliness. Moving her hips in a circular motion Tira gets the blade to it's top speed and is able to maintain this speed on any part of her body (thus the need to spread chakra even) overwhelming her opponent with constant strikes from multiple angles and heights.
    -Note Can only be performed by Tira and those taught by the Alchemist

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    DNR. Ridiculous and doesn't even make sense...like the submission above doesn't.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Mînato View Post
    (Hiraishin: Kurenai Arashi) - Flying Thunder God: Crimson Tempest
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Mid (from seals location)
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: A technique unique to Minato Namikaze, by manipulating the jutsu shiki of the FTG he is able to teleport up to fifty kunai to a seal of his choice, the kunai are summoned directly from a unique seal on his forearm that he must tap, the kunai appear from any seal be it attached to a kunai or placed at any location on the ground, these kunai spread outwards in a 360 degree radius around the seals location covering all directions from the point of arrival flying outwards and can reach up to mid range from there initial point of appearance, the kunai are all tangible and they also bear the seal of the flying thunder god technique.
    As with the FTG technique these kunai arrive at the seal at the speed of space/time, they do however still make noise when they are flying outwards from the point of arrival.

    -Note- Only usable four times per battle.
    -Note- Must have fuuinjutsu at A rank.
    -Note- Only usable by Minato Namikaze and taught by ReXii.

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    DNR. Just no...

    (Hiraishin: Sora Suibou) - Flying Thunder God: Falling Skies
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short (From seals location)
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This technique is unique to Minato Namikaze, the technique begins with the user getting one of his FTG seals airborne, this can be achieved through a number of means from throwing a kunai in to the air, or simply having a flying summon with a seal attached to it fly overhead, once this have been achieved Minato uses the sealing formula in a unique way, teleporting up to two hundred tiny round metal balls, with paper bombs attached that fall from the sky in a five meter radius around the tag, exploding on impact and capable of fully engulfing short range with shrapnel and explosions, the balls are summoned from a sealing formula on Minato's forearm and is used by tapping his forearm to teleport them, each ball is no more than 2 inches in diameter.

    -Note- Only usable two times per battle.
    -Note- Must have fuuinjutsu at S rank.
    -Note- Only usable by Minato Namikaze and taught by ReXii.

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     Declined 
    A paragraph consisting of only one sentence? Nah. Reword it and explain it better. Some parts don't add up.

    (Hitoshirezu Ken) - Hidden Blades
    Rank: S
    Type: CW
    Range: Short-Mid (When fired)
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: 60(A)-80(S) (When enhanced)
    Description: These weapons are uniquely designed for use by Minato namikaze, he witnessed similar weapons being used by an Iwagakure ninja during his mission to destroy Kanabi bridge, upon his return to Konoha he quite liked the design of the weapons and chose to make a set of his own with a few unique traits.
    Firstly the blades themself are strapped and hidden within bracers on each wrist, they are spring loaded and released from the bracer with a flick or bending backwards of the wrist, the blades themselves are of a moderate size, being only around six inches long, they are designed mainly for thrusting attacks but they do have a slashing edge, although not as effective as a slashing weapon it can still prove deadly, as the user can extend the blade further and partially release it via a metal strut allowing it to be wielded in a reverse grip as a set of twin daggers.
    The vambracers act as a housing for the blades and are useful in defense, allowing the user to deflect swords and kunai attacks along with other small ninja weapons away from themselves, even if the blades are yet to be revealed from the vambrace.
    The blades themselves are tagged with the seal of the flying thunder god on each blade, and should the situation call for it Minato is able to fire these blades by forcing wind chakra down the housing chamber, firing the blade is considered an A ranked projectile attack and given the blades small size and it's speed when fired is almost untrackable without a doujutsu.
    The ultimate power of the blades is that they are designed with chakra steel being able to be infused with pure chakra to increase the cutting power of the small blades, when infused with normal chakra the blade gains a solid hue of chakra very similar to Asuma sarutobi's blade extensions, and is considered to have A rank cutting power and an increased length of one inch, however after experimenting with his Kyuubi chakra mode, Minato became able to infuse kyuubi chakra in to the blades, allowing them to gain three inches in length and become completely golden in colour gaining cutting power equal to an S ranked technique, because of the enhanced chakra the blades also become able to slice through an attack up to A ranked in all the base five elements while infused with bijuu chakra.

    -Note- The blades lose the enhancements if fired, only retaining them while held.
    -Note- Reloading a blade in to the vambrace after firing is possibile via a sealing technique inside the housing chamber that stores extra blades.
    -Note- Chakra enhancment counts as one of the users jutsu per turn, and can only be used thrice.
    -Note- Only usable by Minato Namikaze for the Kyuubi chakra enhancement, and taught by ReXii.


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    No. Minato has his FTG...its cannon. Comes with the bio. Don't like them? Get another bio. But approving this is twisting one of the most basic and more unique "aspects" of the bio, twisting it to become something which makes little sense. Not only that but I won't approve any customs for a minato bio that pertains in any way to the kyubi chakra cloak. DNR.
    (Hiraishin: Sora Suibou) - Flying Thunder God: Falling Skies
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short (From seals location)
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This technique is unique to Minato Namikaze, the technique begins with the user getting one of his FTG seals airborne, this can be achieved through a number of means from throwing a kunai in to the air, or simply having a flying summon with a seal attached to it fly overhead, once this have been achieved Minato uses the sealing formula in a unique way, teleporting up to two hundred tiny round metal balls, with paper bombs attached that fall from the sky in a five meter radius around the tag, exploding on impact and capable of fully engulfing short range with shrapnel and explosions, the balls are summoned from a sealing formula on Minato's forearm and is used by tapping his forearm to teleport them, each ball is no more than 2 inches in diameter, the balls teleport to the seals location with the speed of the FTG technique itself, instantly upon the forearm seal being touched, and each ball explodes with the force of a standard exploding tag, as the balls explode they fire shrapnel all around the target area like miniature grenades, that can cause considerable wounds.

    -Note- Only usable two times per battle.
    -Note- Must have fuuinjutsu at S rank.
    -Note- Only usable by Minato Namikaze and taught by ReXii.

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    Yeah, I see why you have problem writing your descriptions...you also have problems reading since you clearly didn't read my previous check.

    (Hiraishin: Kurai mayonaka no uta o hauringu hareyaka.) - Flying thunder god: Radiant howling song of the darkest midnight.
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 90
    Description: This technique is unique to Minato Namikaze, the technique begins with the user drawing and holding six flying thunder god kunai, three in each hand between his fingertips, then using his unique variation of body flicker he dashes towards the opponent in a blur of speed, untrackable to anyone without the sufficient reactions to follow his movement, however as he begins to run he releases the kunai one at a time, to his left and right in sequence, merely releasing them, he reaches the opponent with one rasengan formed, hitting the opponent in the chest with it, however the moment the rasengan connects, he teleports to the first kunai he released, and then zig-zags between each kunai in a flash of teleportation, arriving back in front of the opponent slamming a two handed oodama rasengan of an enormous size comparable to a sage mode enhanced rasengan, able to inflict incredible injury because the original rasengan sticks to the opponents body and rotates to the left while the larger rasengan rotates to the right, creating a grinding effect.
    *Note* Usable once per battle.
    *Note* This technique takes two jutsu slots.
    *Note* Due to stress on the user they are limited to A rank and below the following turn.

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     Declined 
    DNR

    (Katon/Fuuton: Aresu No Tori) - Fire/Wind Style: The Birds Of Ares.
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 90
    Description: This technique is a unique combination technique, the user begins by focusing his wind chakra in to the air all around his opponent forming a dome of wind, that using shape manipulation becomes a large flock of birds made from pure wind chakra, then by combining his fire chakra in to the birds they become engulfed in flames, screeching loudly they begin to flap there wings, releasing thousands of needles made of compressed wind and fire chakra upon the target, these needles are capable of penetrating human flesh to the same degree as a kunai strike, however they stick in the skin of the target and cauterize his wound momentarily, then the user with a snap of his fingers can cause a backdraft effect in the compressed fire needles causing them to violently implode on themselves causing a tremendous explosion.
    *Note* Useable once per battle
    *Note* The user is left in an exhausted state, being able to only use A rank and below techniques in his next turn.
    *Note* The user is unable to use water or lightning techniques in the same turn.

    ________________________________________________
     Declined 
    Similar to existing techniques, oped, should count as two moves and basically not nearly restricted enough. DNR.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    I was unable to understand Scorp's statement so if he was asking us to post only 3 techniques ever since the thread was opened (When you temporarily banned 5 people) then please decline these three as I have already posted three oher jutsu

    Summoning Animal: Assassin Bugs
    Scroll Owner: Hell Autarch
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
    Description and Background: Adult Assassin Bugs often range from 4 to 40 mm however some can be as big as Gamabunta or Gamakichi. They most commonly have an elongated head with a distinct narrowed neck, long legs, and a prominent, segmented tube for feeding (rostrum). Most species are dark in color with hues of brown, black, red, or orange. The most distinctive feature of the family is that the tip of the rostrum fits into a groove in the prosternum, where it is rasped against ridges there (a stridulitrum) to produce sound, a tactic often used to intimidate predators. If harassment continues, they can use their rostrum to deliver a painful bite, which in some species can be medically significant. The saliva of the reduviid species Rhynocoris marginatus (Fab.) and Catamirus brevipennis (Servile) have anti-bacterial activity towards the human pathogens Gram-negative bacteria (Escherichia coli, Pseudomonas aeruginosa, Proteus vulgaris, Salmonella typhimurium) and one Gram-positive (Streptococcus pyogenes).
    Assassin Bug use the long rostrum to inject a lethal saliva that liquefies the insides of the prey, which are then sucked out. The saliva contains enzymes that predigest the tissues they swallow. This process is generally referred to as extra-oral digestion, or EOD. The saliva is commonly effective at killing prey substantially larger than the bug itself.




    (Asashin Geijutsu: Gurētoparasaito Hakai) - Assassin Arts: Great Parasitic Destruction
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user performs a single hand seal and summons a large number of Assassin Bugs inside his mouth. The user opens his mouth and releases hundreds of Assassin Bugs that attack the enemy. Once the Assassin Bugs have successfully attacked the enemy, they inject a lethal saliva into the opponents body which is able to liquidify the insides of the opponent
    Note: Can only be used three times per battle
    Note: The Assassin Bugs summoned belong to the Rasahus species of Assassin Bugs and thus can fly
    Note: Must have signed Assassin Bug contract
    Note: Can only be taught by Hell Autarch

    (Asashin Geijutsu: Tsuinsōdo Kisei Dansu) - Assassin Arts: Twin Swords Parasitic Dance
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user summons Assassin Bugs that start to come out of the user's sleeves and form a katana made out of Assassin Bugs. The user, by grabbing the sword's hilt attacks the opponent. If the user manages to cut any part of the opponents body, some of the Assassin Bugs which were previously part of the sword and had come in contact with the opponents skin, dig deep into the opponents body and inject their lethal saliva into the body
    Note: Can be used 3 times per battle and the user can create a maximum of two swords each time it is used
    Note: Once the sword successfully cuts the opponent, the sword becomes useless and the user can to use this technique again if they wish to create a katana again
    Note: The katana doesn't have anything special about it except for the fact that it is made up of living Assassin Bugs
    Note: Must have signed Assassin Bug Contract
    Note: Can only be taught by Hell Autarch

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    Too generic contract. Assassin bugs is not a species or family of bugs but simply a group where certain predatory bugs are fitted into. Not only that but you don't have an Aburame restriction in it and its basically an aburame copy cat ability that you wish to create. DNR.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Inuzuka Ninjutsu: Wolfman Technique (Inuzuka Ninjutsu: Urufu Man No Jutsu)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: [+10 to the user][+20 Inuzuka Techs.]
    Description: The user will perform one handseal then slam their hands together causing the transformation to activate, the users hair will grow longer all over their body and their face will become elongated and their speed will increase and they will be able to run more like an animal due to the changes in their body.
    Notes/Restrictions
    -It's the upgraded version of 4-legged technique
    -Requires 2 turn breaks
    -Can only be used 6 times
    -Effects lasts 3 turns before their body will return to normal
    -Must know 4-legged technique
    -Must have 4-legged technique active
    Changing

    Final Stage


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    VM me with the link to your inuzuka training.

    Hell's Gift (Jigoku No Gifuto )
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: C-B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 15-20
    Damage: 30-40
    Description: The weapon has three stages one is the axe, that is 8 feet long when extended 4 when folded up, which is when it's at it's weakest and it's only ability is to absorb chakra and make the blades reach a little better as well as making things easier to slice through.
    It is composed of a light weight and very strong alloy as well as chakra metals.
    As the user focuses more chakra into it the blade ,that is 8 feet long, will change almost instantly in a cloud of smoke it will change into a sword with the capability to release a wave of wind and chakra that travels along the ground outwards in a circle around the user after being stabbed into the ground. The wave is 12 feet high and curves slightly inwards at the top and extended into mid-range. It also has the ability to heat up naturally and extend it's reach.

    Resting State

    Second State



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    Nothing here that hasn't been done before or that is deserving of a CW.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    1st Custom Submission:

    Summoning Animal: Giraffes
    Scroll Owner: Neonian
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: Neos (if bottom custom gets approved)
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
    Description and Background: The giraffe is an African even-toed ungulate mammal, the tallest living terrestrial animal and the largest ruminant. Its species name refers to its camel-like appearance and the patches of color on its fur. Its chief distinguishing characteristics are its extremely long neck and legs, its horn-like ossicones and its distinctive coat patterns. It stands 5–6 m tall and has an average weight of 1,600 kg for males and 830 kg for females. The coat has dark blotches or patches (which can be orange, chestnut, brown or nearly black in color) separated by light hair (usually white or cream in color). Male giraffes become darker as they age.

    2nd Custom Submission:

    (Kirin Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Giraffe Summoning Technique)
    Type: Attack/Deffense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Range
    Chakra Cost: 40 (10 per turn on Battlefield)
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user pulls out a medium size scroll from his back and places his hand on it.
    This summons Neos the Boss/Leader of the Giraffes.
    Neos is able to swipe his large neck across the opponents side of the battlefield as a big pole, or slam it in a vertical motion.
    As him being tall and big as he is, he can stomp the ground making creators in the ground tripping the opponent.
    If must needed he can run at large distances in little time from his large figure,.
    Neos has been shown to preform A Rank Fire Jutsu's from being taught by a Ninja who once visited him, also making his body capable of withstanding and protecting the user from B Rank Fire Type Jutsu's.

    Note
    - This Summoning can only be in play for 4 turns.
    - He only uses fire justu's from his mouth
    - This Summoning can only be Summoned twice per battle (But not in a row)


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    no additional formatting. read the opening post of this thread.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Darui.. View Post
    (Ranton: Shisso kame bōei ) - Storm Release: Spartan Tortoise Defense
    Rank: S
    Type: Defense/ Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:
    Using the advanced nature of Storm Release, the user will swiftly complete 2 handseals while manipulating their Storm chakra. An assortment of Storm will start to release from their hands quickly surrounding the user forming an almost impenetrable bubble of sort at first glance. This part of the jutsu can be used to defend the user from attacks or blunt force from all around the user. If necessary, the user can complete another handseal as in a sequence, causing the bubble to shape itself into that of an assortment of Spartan shields that forms 360 degree protection around the user or they can manipulate it to a desired section around them. Along with the shields also comes an assortment of Spartan spears that erupt stabbing anything within close range of the jutsu. This gives off the total defense of a Spartan army that specializes in rare combat, that defends first with a blunt attack, then counterattacks with precision and speed.
    Note: The first stage of this technique gives the user complete protection from all angles at the cost of not being able to move or do any other jutsu
    Note: The second stage of this technique attacks and gives defense to all angles except for the ground
    Note: the user must stay stationary in order for this technique to work or they’ll be interrupted
    Note: If only using the first part of the jutsu, the user cant use any Storm Techniques A-rank or above next turn, if the second part is used, the user can’t use B-Rank or above Storm Techniques for the next 2 turns
    Note: Usuable 2 times per battle
    Note: Must be taught by Darui..



    X-Declined-X A bubble of laser? and it cant be impenetrable
    Resubmitting

    (Ranton: Shisso kame bōei ) - Storm Release: Spartan Tortoise Defense
    Rank: S
    Type: Defense/ Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:
    Using the advanced nature of Storm Release, the user will swiftly complete 2 handseals while manipulating their Storm chakra. An assortment of Storm will start to release from their hands quickly surrounding the user forming a hemisphere at first glance. This part of the jutsu can be used to defend the user from attacks or blunt force from all around the user. If necessary, the user can complete another handseal as in a sequence, causing the hemisphere to shape itself into that of an assortment of Spartan shields that forms 360 degree protection around the user or they can manipulate it to a desired section around them such as to protect their head, legs, arm, etc. Along with the shields also comes an assortment of Spartan spears that erupt stabbing anything within close range of the jutsu. This gives off the total defense of a Spartan army that specializes in rare combat, that defends first with a blunt attack, then counterattacks with precision and speed.
    Note: The hemisphere is big enough to fit two people in a short range, allowing it to cover them also
    Note: This technique attacks and gives defense to all angles except for the ground
    Note: No Storm Release S-Rank or above the following turn
    Note: The user must stay stationary in order for this technique to work or they’ll be interrupted
    Note: Useable 2 times per battle
    Note: Must be taught by Darui..



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    For me it doesn't make sense that you can achieve this in the way you describe it and its a bit too powerful...
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Tsumetai Ame | Freezing Rain
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs 3 handseals and using his chakra, bounces raindrops in mid air back to the clouds, cooling them immensely. The raindrops become supercooled while passing through a sub-freezing layer of air many hundreds of feet above the surface, and then freeze upon impact with any object they encounter. The resulting ice, called glaze, can accumulate to a thickness of several centimeters. Unlike rain and snow mixed, ice pellets, or hail, freezing rain is made entirely of liquid droplets. The drops themselves do not freeze. But being supercooled, when they strike the ground or any other object, they instantly freeze.
    -Freezing rain lasts for two turns.
    -Freezing/glaze ice lasts for two turns before melting into water.
    -Usable once every two turns
    -Can only be taught by Naizen.

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    (Raiton: Hekireki Dohyou.) Lightning Style: Thunder Arena
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Long-short
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: N/A(will destroy everything inside after 5 turns)
    Description: One of the most devastating Lightning jutsu ever created. It's exsistance was hidden for many years until it was re discovered. This is a jutsu described as "The most evil adaption to the Raiton element imaginable". The user of this jutsu will start by channel large ammounts of Raiton chakra into 4 points over the battle field. Each point is 20 metres apart and form a perfect square. Once the chakra has been gathered the user will compress it into 4 large nodes (each around 4m in diameter). These nodes will begin to expell highly concentrated Lightning connecting them all together. Once fully connected to each other they will spread out, causing a thick blanket of pure lightning to envelope the entire area within the nodes. This creates a large cube of lightning around the user and the opponent. This lightning also stretches into the ground meaning anything that goes underground will be heavily eletrocuted to the point of death. Once all 4 nodes have completed the cube they will each create a positive and negative charge to each other. This causes all of the nodes to begin to come towards each other. Although this is a slow process the large cube will begin to close 5m for each of the users turns. The only way to stop this jutsu is to break one of the nodes before the connections are made. Once the connections are made the walls of the lightning are so thick that even high level wind jutsu can only just pass through. Even if sustaining damage the nodes will repair any of it almost immediately as the damage is sustained thus making it almost impenetrable. On the final turn the nodes will all come into each other, using the pure raiton walls to turn anything on the inside to ash.

    Restrictions:
    Can only be used once
    Can only be stopped by destroying the nodes before a full connection is made
    Lasts 4 turns, on the last turn everything inside is destroyed.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    New Cycle


    You know the drill. Its opened for a new cycle of 3 techniques per user for one week counting from today. One Cycle = one Week but one Week is not immediately one Cycle. Read the markers to be sure you're not bypassing the rules.

    Also, I must remind members to read the rules (check the first post of this thread), read the thread and get familiar with what is approvable and is not, etc. Tons of techniques still are submitted without abiding to the template for example and that is auto decline. And its ridiculous to have a submission declined because of incorrect chakra or damage info. [B]Be smart and make sure your submission abides the templates.

    Members currently banned from this thread:

    Aízen; Permanently; Offensive behavior
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    Fusion Reborn; Not Following the rules
    Délta; 5 cycles; Offensive behavior, not following the rules
    Dionysos; Undefined Length; Not following the rules
    Naizen; 1 cycle; Posting after the end of the Cycle
    noni1997; 1 cycle; Not following the rules, altering a quote
     
         

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    (Sukuriputo Gigei : Saisho no tsuk: Gaia no shainingumūn) Script Arts : First Moon: Shining Moon of Gaia
    Type: Offensive | Defensive | Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short- Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The First “ Moon” Series of the Script Arts. This move was made after a skilled staff fighter once fought a Samurai and saw the Samurai Sabre in action. This made the man more impressed and wanted to increase his power in the arts of combat. By imbedding his staff with his chakra and creating an equilibrium between him and his staff he was able to achieve the first Moon Technique known as Shining Moon of Gaia. The move is based on the concept of the Samurai Sabre, but unlike the Samurai it was carried for staffs. Around the staff is a layer of chakra creating a “shell” which the user can using to actually slash through elemental chakra of equal ranking and below. The staff can also be made to reshape into two weapons, a sword and axe which the user can use to attack the target

    -Can counter ninjutsu up to A-Rank
    - Due to it being noting but chakra flow, the user can keep it active as long as they needed to be but once deactivated cannot be used again for battle
    -Can only be taught by Aoi.


     Declined  No usage limit for an A-rank? Mid range? Keep it active while he wants to? Not only does that not make sense as its exploitable. Also, Raw chakra will be weak to elemental chakra unless spcial shaping is involved.

    (Sukuriputo Gigei: Furasshu o hauringu) Script Arts : Howling Flash
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will channel their lighting chakra into the base of there staff, then being manipulating it, the user will slam the butt of the staff into the ground and allow the lighting to release into the sky above the battle. After 1 turn has passed the sky would turn into a lighting storm generated by the mass amount of chakra sent into the sky by the user. The user can then when needed can use his staff and generating his lighting chakra, summon down a rain of 4 lightning bolts that travel at speeds that only a shinboi with Dojutsu can see and strike down the target, burining them and exhausting them

    -Clouds remain for 3 turns
    -Can be used twice per battle
    -Each time the user summons lightning down, It counts as a move
    -Requires 1 turn for Clouds to form.


     Declined  Technique is similar to existing techniques only using a staff...
     
         
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    ( Fuuton: Aoi Tsuru ) Wind Release: Cerulean Crane

    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+5 to keep active)
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user performs three handseals, charging wind chakra around him/herself, 6 meters radius. In a few seconds, the air is sucked towards the user's hand or foot, removing all oxygen within the sphere into a 6 meter's long thin blade of air, communicating with the outside air/oxygen while keeping it from inside the sphere. With a passive spark of lightning chakra or fire chakra, the blade will quickly ignite into a concentrated blue flame, burning with pure oxygen.
    *The user coats his/her hands with chakra in order to prevent the burning. The blade itself starts 10 cm from the user's palm or sole.
    *The user protects him/herself with a helmet of oxygen, which lasts only 2 turns*
    *Not breaking the technique after two turns results in the asphyxiation of the user within a turn*
    *Can only be used 3 times per battle*
    *Can't use Wind jutsus higher than S rank in the next turn*
    *Fire is smothered out within the sphere, making it impossible to use fire after the blade activates. It can be used to take out existing fire, which will then be guiding into the blade, activating it*
    *Can't be used against S rank Fire, resulting in too big a flame being sucked into the hand/foot.


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    This is overly complicated. I would approve it if you would simply use wind chakra to concentrate oxygen from the air around you into a blade-like weapon almost made of pure oxygen which you can then ignite and sustain. The part about creating a "spherical" area around you with no oxygen is a no no. It would break the concept of Wind being weak against Fire and it would also be stretching out the whole element a bit too far.

    (Fuuinjutsu: Panikku Osutoricchi ) Sealing Technique: Panicked Ostrich

    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A variation of Generic Sealing Technique, it allows the user to seal him/herself within a chosen storage scroll, which can be done in pre-prepared scrolls with a single handseal or through the same seal used in Generic Sealing Technique. The variation comes from the ability to seal corpses, whereas the user mimics that by using one's own chakra to seal oneself, making it so that there is no sort of resistance or conflict with different chakra systems. The sealing is done very quickly, in a matter of a second, where the user is seemingly sucked into the scroll, head first. Only the user can be sealed within the storage scroll, any active jutsu will be disrupted and vanish.
    The user is contained in a black void dimension, allowing only a few minutes before asphyxiation. With a second handseal, the user can unseal him/herself back to the world.
    *Can only be 1 turn inside the seal, else the user will asphyxiate*
    *The user is able to feel the scroll through chakra, as well as any chakra source in contact with it. I.e. opponent's standing within a meter of the scroll without Chakra Suppression, or with Chakra Supression in physical contact with the Scroll, exception being Muu and Karin
    *Only the user can seal or unseal the scroll*
    *The scroll, simple paper normally, suffers no defensive bonus, meaning the user is forcefully spat back, with full damage taken, case something destroys the seal, the only connection between the outside world and the black void.*
    *Mastering Fuuinjutsu allows the usage of this technique at half the chakra cost*

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     Approved 
    Though to be honest, this seems useless to me. O_o But hey...whatever floats your boat!

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    ( Suiton/Raiton: Chame no Raikou) Water/Lightning Style: The Lick of the Stressed Urchin

    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: After performing 3 handseals, the user is able to create a great bead of water, up to 1 meter diameter, anywhere within range (Up to 50 meters from the user), by condensing water from the air around. This bead will have the cohesion and adhesion levels pumped to the max, creating a very tight bubble which pins though and attaches itself to any material it comes in contact with. The user is always able to sense the position of the sphere, spatially in relation with himself, and, when it attaches with something, the user is able to determine if the substance has chakra or not (Similar to Rain Tiger at Will), and is able to pull chakra from it, a take on the water's vital and cleansing techniques. It absorbs 50% of the chakra used to create the technique ( 20 chakra ) per turn it is attached. If the user touches the bead, it can re-absorb the chakra back to him/her. With one handseal, the user can charge lightning chakra into the core of the bead, make the bead explode into multiple long and thin spikes, reaching up to 10 meters each, which can pierce strong materials and paralyze the target up to 3 turns. The user can create the spikes only to one side, or even create only one spike. The lightning infusion is considered A rank in strength.
    Likewise, the user is able to create multiple tiny beads (up to 200), across an area of 5 meters radius. Each will only absorb up to 5% chakra per turn ( 1 chakra ). When lightning is charged, it can only be charged into 1, creating a spiked explosion up to 3 meters, paralyzing for 2 turns, and being only B rank in strength.
    *The bead, or group of beads, is considered A rank*
    *The user is able to move the bead(s) around. When the user does, except in the inital turn, it counts as a jutsu.
    *Charging lightning can be performed in any turn after the initial, with no additional chakra expenses, but it will cost one jutsu.
    *After lightning is charged, only 50% of the chakra stored within the beads returns to the user, and the bead vanishes in a puddle of water (along with the rest of the beads, if used the tiny variation).
    *Can only be used twice per battle*
    *Lasts a maximum of 5 turns*
    *Can't use Water or Lightning jutsus above S rank in the same and next 2 turns of usage*
    *Requires 2 turns cooldown between usages, counting after the end of the previous usage*
    *Follows elemental strength and weaknesses*

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    The lightning part makes this too oped.
    ( Suiton/Raiton: Chame no Raikou) Water/Lightning Style: The Lick of the Stressed Urchin

    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: After performing 3 handseals, the user is able to create a great bead of water, up to 1 meter diameter, anywhere within range (Up to 50 meters from the user), by condensing water from the air around. This bead will have the cohesion and adhesion levels pumped to the max, creating a very tight bubble which pins though and attaches itself to any material it comes in contact with. The user is always able to sense the position of the sphere, spatially in relation with himself, and, when it attaches with something, the user is able to determine if the substance has chakra or not (Similar to Rain Tiger at Will), and is able to pull chakra from it, a take on the water's vital and cleansing techniques. It absorbs 50% of the chakra used to create the technique ( 20 chakra ) per turn it is attached. If the user touches the bead, he can re-absorb the chakra back to him/her. With one handseal, the user can charge lightning chakra into the core of the bead, make the bead explode into multiple long and thin spikes, reaching up to 3 meters each, which can pierce strong materials and paralyze the target up to 2 turns. The user can create the spikes only to one side, or even create only one spike. The lightning infusion is considered A rank in strength.
    Likewise, the user is able to create multiple tiny beads (up to 200), across an area of 5 meters radius. Each will only absorb up to 5% chakra per turn ( 1 chakra ). When lightning is charged, it can only be charged into 1, creating a spiked explosion up to 1.5 meters, paralyzing for 1 turns, and being only B rank in strength.
    *The bead, or group of beads, is considered A rank*
    *The user is able to move the bead(s) around. When the user does, except in the initial turn, it counts as a jutsu.
    *Charging lightning can be performed in any turn after the initial, with no additional chakra expenses, but it will cost one jutsu.
    *After lightning is charged, only 50% of the chakra stored within the beads returns to the user, and the bead vanishes in a puddle of water (along with the rest of the beads, if used the tiny variation).
    *Can only be used thrice per battle*
    *Lasts a maximum of 5 turns*
    *Can't use Water or Lightning jutsus above S rank in the same and next 2 turns of usage*
    *Requires 2 turns cooldown between usages, counting after the end of the previous usage*
    *Follows elemental strength and weaknesses*

    X-Pending-X Wallies have scorps' name on it..

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    I will not approve this while it has the lightning part. Not only is it stretching it too mcuh as it prevents against using earth as a defense which I can't allow, taking into account this already sucks chakra from the target and you can create it anywhere and even in the opponents blind spot directly on him. If this sucks chakra and such, it doesn't need the damage.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Ramiā) - Summoning Technique: Lamia
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb and wipes blood over a tattoo placed on a body part and slams his hands on the ground to call forth the legendary Lamia, she is a fairly large gryphon and is able to carry a total of five people on her back, she is slightly larger than sasuke's hawk, thought that what makes her special is her distracting appearance, Lamia is distinguished from all griffins in existence. She has a demonic appearance due to her snake like head and giant fangs protruding out of her mouth, not to mention her dark blue eyes resembeling her elemental affinity, Suiton. Lamia has a very interesting bone strucutre which is dense from the inside, thus making her physical body very muscular, similar to that of the earth griffin Amaymon. She also has a very large tail that reaches upto mid range, her tail is also very dangerous since she can use it to inflict fatal damage to her opponents by using it as a whip due to its properties being equal to a giant iron hammer which acts as a weapon for Lamia, she is also capable of telepathically speaking with her summoner. She has the manipulation of the water affinity, from her birth she was trained intensively to master the water element making her more accustomed to it, therefore she can use every water technique the summoner is able to use (counting towards the users moves) thought there has to be a water source present on the battlefield before she can perform any water techniques, Lamia is often refered to as the Water Griffin. [Appearance]

    ♦ Note: Lamia can only be summoned once per battle.
    ♦ Note: Lamia can stay on the field for 4 turns per battle.
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by the holder of the griffin contract.
    ♦ Note: The summoner must have mastered the required element inorder to summon Lamia.

    X-Declined-X Include the details of you acquiring ownership of griffin. Whatever proof you have, you should use it to update the contract before it causes you any trouble. I'll add, since they are Chimera Griffin are specifically Eagles and Lions mixed together, no further changes in appearances unless your contract outlines this. Add that she cant perform Forbidden ranked water techniques.

    (Raiton/Suiton: Nijuu-Dai Go Ya) - Lightning/Water Style: The 25th Night-Baam
    Type: Offensive, Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: This technique is a highly advanced water and lightning combination jutsu, which requires alot of effort to perform. So after performing the Ram → Horse → Ox hand signs the user is able to summon a number of five orbs of water within short range each one being relatively big, preferably around the user. The user will then compress the orbs after summoning them, the orbs will be reduced to a smaller size [comparable with the size of an regular rasengan] this happens immediately after the summoning process. To finish it off, the practitioner will form and extra hands sign → Dog, this results in the user releasing a powerful discharge of electricity that is shot into the orbs rotating around the user, which act as several conductors attracting the lightning it self. The discharge made by the user is so powerful that it forces the orbs to be forcefully shot forward, torwards the opponent at the speed of the electricity coursing through the orbs. Once it is shot it'll expand on its way torwards the target, not only that it'll also explode once it comes into contact with any object. The explosion within causes a burst of electricity to mix with the expanding orbs of condensed water, which electrifies the water in return resulting in a deadly combination of lightning and water. The five orbs expand simultaneously creating multiple pools of highly electrified water with exploding force of the lightning. The volume of water is great enough to leave a small pool of water behind on the battle field, thus acting as a nearby resource for the user. Follow the links if you don't understand. [Part I & Part II]

    ♦ Note: This technique can only be taught by Lucifer.
    ♦ Note: This technique can only be used twice per battle.
    ♦ Note: This jutsu counts as 2 of the 3 techniques allowed per turn.
    ♦ Note: The user can't perform any lightning/water jutsu above A-Rank the following turn.



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    They can't be summoned. Sorry but you need to form them from moisture and chakra like any other water technique. Also, when they are infused with lightning they will not be shot at the speed of the lightning... That doesn't even make sense and its increadibly unreasonable in an already powerful technique.Also the whole pools? Nope. Since you don't have Y/Y or storm you can't keep the water electrified except for a few moments. The moment it impacts, the lightning disperses into the target and ends. Also, the quantity of water is a bit over the top. Now, the "follow the links if you don't understand" is a break of the blue rule. I'll let it slide this time but don't do that again. If you have anything you wish to explain on your submission, you need to do so in the description of it, not through links or external content. Even if its a pciture, its there to complement and such but never to explain something. Why? Because when you fight with the technique, you won't be posting the picture every single time so you'll need to relay only in the description and its only the description that matters.

    Kuro Kōshin - Black March
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: As a weapon, it is jet black, and extremely thin with a slightly thicker handle. On the handle "Black March - 黒行進" is embroidered in cursive. Black March is a very unique type of weapon, since it doesn't have a appearance of a common weapon, due to its simple yet unique features, distinguishing Black March from any other weapons in existence. This weapon was forged during the first shinobi world war, it was originally forged by an old priest named Enryū famous for his unique craftsmanship, who lived in an abandoned shrine near the outskirts of Amegakure, it was said to be completely Black in appearance and contained some of Enryū's own blood and chakra. Due to containing some of Enryū's blood and chakra it also gained a soul which laid dormant for many years until it found its true master. As the years passed and the five great villages came into existence, this weapon was finally discovered by a young man who found it in the previously abandoned shrine during his travels. He took it with him and reforged the weapon himself during his travels, the weapon was in a quite bad shape, it originally had the appearance of an black needle until he coated it with special minerals found deep within the Kumogakure mountains, making the needle slightly longer 175 cm. Not only that he also added a thin black metallic chain to hilt nearly 2 meters in length with a small hook attached on the end, the chain is always wrapped around the users torso area, the added minerals made Black March indestructible. The needle did not have a scabbard itself, instead it was wrapped in a black cloth and was carried on the users back hidden from any foe. Thought after the man had reforged the needle it began showing signs of live, it called out to its master. It is also mentioned that the Needle reflects the inner soul of it's carrier, it gained a malevolent black aura when carried by the young man. If someone else touches it other than Lucifer, Black March will react accordingly in response of protecting its current master. Whoever touches black march will suffer a fate worse than death, it'll release a number of minuscule needles through the handle into the bloodstream of its intended target causing severe damage to the internal organs and excruciating pain followed by death. [Actual Appearance]

    Dāku Kaimetsū 一 Dark Destruction The needles first ability revolves around a lightning based technique, it's capable of performing (Raiton: Ikazuchi Hakai) – Lightning Release: Lightning Destruction. This can only be done if the metallic chain is directly touching the ground or any part of Black March, it releases/conducts lightning chakra throughout the metallic chain attached to the hilt. This technique will be slightly more powerful when performed by Black March as it is capable of traveling torwards long range distance instead of only mid range. The destruction along the way is also much greater and wider than it was before, this affects the battle field permanently making it a rocky terrain. [S-Rank]

    Dāku Riparusā 一 Dark Repulser The needles second ability revolves around reflection, its capable of reflecting energy based attacks such as Fire & Lightning related techniques or a combination of both. Due to these two elements having no real solid form, thus it can be repelled by Black March if it comes in contact with any part of the needle itself including the 2 meter long metalic chain attached to the hilt. Black March emits a malevolent black aura once the incoming technique is redirected torwards its origin. The energy based attack is send back from where it was originally fired, thought the user can slightly alter the angle of the incoming technique. This ability can only be used twice per battle due to the heavy strain it puts upon Black March and its master. [S-Rank]

    Dāku Nīdoru 一 Dark Needle The needles last ability revolves around its signature technique, Black March is capable of creating several minuscule needles on Black March it self, protruding from the main needle. This ability is very useful in close combat, the small needles emerge from the main one and can be fired as countless minuscule needles torwards the enemy by a simple swing made by the user. Black March is capable of guiding the needles torwards multiple enemies, so they can strike their targets from different angles at once. These can also be used in close combat by pointing Black March torwards the opponent or in combination with Kenjutsu techniques. (Dōjutsu users & Sensors can easily keep track of them) These needles are also fully capable of conducting pure lightning chakra as the needle itself contains iron properties. [A-Rank]

    ♦ Note: This weapon can only be wielded by Lucifer.
    ♦ Note: The user cannot use two of Black March's abilities in a single turn.
    ♦ Note: Each ability used by Black March counts torwards the users 3 jutsus per turn.
    ♦ Note: Each one of Black March's abilities can only be used trice per battle except the second ability.

    X-Both Pending-X For Scorps

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    Ok, many things wrong here. First, the whole "fate worse than death" needs to go. It can be exploited as it clearly says "If someone else touches it other than Lucifer, Black March will react accordingly in response of protecting its current master. Whoever touches black march will suffer a fate worse than death, it'll release a number of minuscule needles through the handle into the bloodstream of its intended target causing severe damage to the internal organs and excruciating pain followed by death." Basically, anyone who touches it dies. Thats a no no. If it can only eb wielded by you? Ok, thats normal. But not with such a description. My CW was the first CW to, instead of simply shooting elemental blasts or what not, power existing techniques that would be used trhough it. I don't like people copying that idea without asking me first and when they do that without asking, I don't allow it. So get a new ability. The reflection is a no no. Not only does that collide with existing customs and cw, as its also illogical in how you describe its achieved. I don't have a big issue with it being able to dispel/defend such techniques but you need to explain how that is done and nver can you simply reverse and send a technique back like that. Finally, the shooting of needles which doujutsu can sensors can easily keep trakc is the same as saying no one else can but them. No. And conducting the pure lightning, unless you explain what you mean by that is also a no.
     
         
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    (Fuuton: Haha shikyū) Wind Style: Mother's Womb
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user focuses their wind chakra on the floor underneath their opponent. They will then stomp down on the ground causing a strong, but harmless, torrent of wind to shoot up from underneath the opponent which the user will then manipulate in order to create a concentrated orb of wind that encloses their opponent. The orb encloses around the opponent in a tight fashion, leaving them in a sitting position before it gradually shrinks until the opponent is forced to take a fetal position like the times when they were in their mothers womb. The wind orb consists of many racing wind currents that rapidly circulate around the opponent, creating a near solid orb inside and out, while making it difficult for the opponent to breath as outside air cannot penetrate the orb leaving them with the little amount of air that was captured when the orb first formed. The orb is strong enough to withstand most elemental and raw chakra attacks, following the strengths and weaknesses, and once inside if the user does not counter correctly their attack may end up backfiring, but if they do not escape in time then the user will faint due to lack of air.
    NOTES
    ►Can be used 3x per battle
    ►If the user does not escape within that turn they will faint due to lack of oxygen
    ►Can only be taught by Zanda

    X-Declined-X Given that there are already very few defences for this technique, it should be S ranked. And why no hand seals? Isnt this OP

    (Fūinjutsu: Shirizokeru) Sealing Art: Repulse
    Rank: B
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This is a special two way seal, that can be created by writing the formula on your body and then injecting either Fire or Earth chakra into it where it then lays dormant on the body, turning invisible, until activated. Once the user has been engaged within close range with an enemy that attempts to inject chakra within the users body through taijutsu the seal will activate on the users body, appearing around the initial area of contact, absorbing the injected chakra into it while injecting the opponent's body part with either Fire or Earth chakra. The user still takes the full hit of the taijutsu attack, but with one hand seal from the user, the opponent will either feel an extreme burning feeling in their joints as they attempt to move them or an extreme stiffness depending on the chakra placed in the seal. This prevents the opponent from performing any hand seals in their next turn. This seal can only absorb up to B ranked chakra at once, and only one type of chakra seal can be place on the body. The seal can activate up to three separate times before disappearing leaving the user to create another one outside of battle.
    NOTES
    ► Seal activates 3x before disappearing
    ► User can create another seal outside of battle
    ►Can only be taught by Zanda

    Link to Fuin training: http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...1#post10858629

    X-Declined-X Explain the bolded part
    (Fuuton: Haha shikyū) Wind Style: Mother's Womb
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user focuses their wind chakra on the floor underneath their opponent as they perform 2 hand seal before stomping down on the ground causing a strong, but harmless, torrent of wind to shoot up from underneath the opponent. The user will then manipulate the torrent of wind in order to create a concentrated orb of wind that encloses around their opponent trapping them in a small circular space. The space inside the orb is tight, leaving them in a sitting position before it gradually shrinks until the opponent is forced to take a fetal position like the times when they were in their mothers womb. The wind orb consists of many racing wind currents that rapidly circulate around the opponent, creating a near solid concentrated wind orb inside and out, while making it difficult for the opponent to breath as outside air cannot penetrate the orb leaving them with the little amount of air that was captured when the orb first formed. The orb is strong enough to withstand most elemental and raw chakra attacks, following the strengths and weaknesses, and once inside if the user does not counter correctly their attack may end up backfiring, but if they do not escape in time then the user will faint due to lack of air.
    NOTES
    ►Can be used once per battle
    No wind over A rank next turn
    ►If the opponent does not escape the orb by next turn they will faint due to lack of oxygen
    ►Can only be taught by Zanda
    X-Approved-X Made changes.


    (Fūinjutsu: Shirizokeru) Sealing Art: Repulse
    Rank: B
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This is a special two way seal, that can be created by writing the formula on your body and then injecting either Fire or Earth chakra into it where it then lays dormant on the body, turning invisible, until activated. Once the user has been engaged within close range with an enemy that attempts to inject chakra within the users body through taijutsu the seal will activate on the users body, appearing around the initial area of contact, absorbing the injected chakra into it while injecting the opponent's body part with either Fire or Earth chakra. The user still takes the full hit of the taijutsu attack, but with one hand seal from the user, the opponent will either feel an extreme burning feeling in their joints as they attempt to move them or an extreme stiffness depending on the chakra placed in the seal. This prevents the opponent from performing any hand seals in their next turn. This seal can only absorb up to B ranked chakra at once, and only one type of chakra seal can be place on the body. The seal can activate up to three separate times throughout the battle, through 3 separate B ranked chakra injecting taijutsu moves, where the sealing formula then breaks and fades. The user will not be able to create the seal again until the battle is over.
    NOTES
    ► Seal activates 3x before disappearing.
    ► User can create another seal outside of battle
    The rank of techniques will still play a role and the opponents wont be harmed if thier body is cloaked with a strong enough coat of chakra.
    ►Can only be taught by Zanda


    X-Approved-X Made changes.
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 09-25-2013 at 10:57 PM.

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