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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    ±± New weekly cycle of submissions starting today at the
    16th of April and ending on the 22nd of April. Remember you can only submit 3 techniques between markers ±±
     
         

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Eagle

    Scroll Owner: Gaara

    Other Users who have signed contract: None At the moment

    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A

    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: All species of eagle

    Description and Background: Eagles are members of the bird family Accipitridae, and belong to several genera which are not necessarily closely related to each other.Eagles are large, powerfully built birds of prey, with a heavy head and beak. Even the smallest eagles, like the Booted Eagle (which is comparable in size to a Common Buzzard or Red-tailed Hawk), have relatively longer and more evenly broad wings, and more direct, faster flight. (Despite reduced size in aerodynamic feathers) Most eagles are larger than any other raptors apart from some vultures. Like all birds of prey, eagles have very large hooked beaks for tearing flesh from their prey, strong muscular legs, and powerful talons. The beak is typically heavier than most other birds of prey. They also have extremely keen eyesight (up to 3.6 times human acuity for the martial eagle) which enables them to spot potential prey from a very long distance. This keen eyesight is primarily contributed by their extremely large pupils which ensure minimal diffraction (scattering) of the incoming light. The female of all species of eagle known are larger than the male. seimei no ki(Tree of life) is an extremely large tree that holds all eagles, battle-type and non-battle-type.

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    ¥(kuchiyose ninpou: kin)- Summoning ninja art: Kin¥
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user bites their thumb and wipes their blood on the summoning tatoo, preforming the summoning technique and summons the forth kin, the golden lightning eagle of seimei no ki. It got its name because of it's golden colour feathers that shine very bright in the sunlight. Kin is the species of the bald eagles. Kin knows how to speak and can communicate with the user or opponent when needed.Kin is very rebellious with new contract signers, but begins to become more and more friendly after each battle. Since he is an eagle , he has very strong muscular legs, and powerful talons for tearing flesh from their prey.It is twice as big as sasuke's hawk, being able to carry up to four people on its back. Because of its lightning affinity he flies at extremely fast speeds at 100mph. Being a hunter eagle, it also has very good eyesight, being able to see things clearly from high in the sky.Because of the lightning affinity he has, he is able to release lightning in the shape of a spear from its mouth that can reach up to mid-range and is equal to a A-rank attack. Also, by flapping its wings, it can release small waves of wind that can sweep an opponent of its feet. Kin as well can preform up to S-rank lightning techniques that don't require hand-seals. Kin is known as the lightning eagle of seimi no ki
    Note: Using an ability of kin Counts towards the users three moves
    Note: Can only be summoned once per battle
    Note: Stays on the field for four turns
    Note: Can only be used by those who have summoned the eagle contract

    -Leaving for Scorps-


    ±± All Declined ±± Contract taken
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 04-24-2012 at 08:58 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Lightning Fist
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: F
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 100 (-20 to user)
    Description: The user punches forwards and unleashes his lightning chakra to its highest level taking on the shape of a fist as it travels towards his opponent. This fist is massive and near impossible to avoid due to the user being able to curve it as it is his arm. Once done the users arm is covered in Third Degree Burns.
    ~User gets 20 damage due to burning from lightning on his arm.
    ~No lightning above B rank for the rest of the fight
    ~Can only be taught by Zoro..

    -Declined-
    I don't even know where to start. Japanese name? Missing. Damage points? 90, not 100. Also, it can't be something that fast considering if you're going to use it in a taijutsu fight. You need some time to prepare and accumulate such amount of chakra. Lastly, restrictions aren't enough. I don't even know why you bothered yourself posting this here.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Updating this:
    (Doton: Hebi Kyouran) - Earth release: Snakes Frenzy
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: After using Swamp of the underworld the user does one hand seal and concentrates his chakra on the swamp to make several (Maximum of 7) snakes to emerge from the swamp and head towards the target at fast pace, these snakes are roughly around 1 meter long and have the strength of an average snake, meaning they can bind the opponent and easily stop him from moving but they can also be destroyed easily with the appropriate technique.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.
    Note: can only be used after Swamp of the underworld.
    Note: User can make the snakes emerge from anywhere in the swamp.
    Note: No S-rank Earth technique next turn.
    (Doton: Hebi Kyouran) - Earth release: Snakes Frenzy
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: After using Swamp of the underworld the user does one hand seal and concentrates his chakra on the swamp to four snakes to emerge from the swamp and head towards the target at fast pace, these snakes are roughly 10 meters long and have the strength of an average snake, meaning they can bind the opponent and easily stop him from moving but they can also be destroyed easily with the appropriate technique.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.
    Note: can only be used after Swamp of the underworld.
    Note: User can make the snakes emerge from anywhere in the swamp.
    Note: No S-rank Earth technique next turn and in same turn

    ~ You do realize that 'average' snake is an ambiguous term ? Snakes range from the grass snake, which can't tie up a baby, to an anaconda that can tie up a horse. Since you probably aren't going for average grass snake-wise, explain in more detail. ~

    took out ''several (Maximum of 7)''

    Link to approval of contract.

    (Bou Mushi no Jutsu: hitoshirezu Bou) Stick Insect Technique: Hidden Stick
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: In this technique, the user has a stick insect hidden within his sleeves, the stick insect is 3 inches long and is extremely thin and almost looks like a needle. The insect has the ability to focus lightning chakra on the outside of his body and adding the fact that he is extremely thin, he has the ability to pierce through some Earth jutsu. The insect is shot out by the user at any time he wants, and the insect travels towards his opponent extremely fast and upon contact he can release all the lightning chakra focused into the opponents body, leaving the opponent paralyzed.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.
    Note: Must have Stick Insect summoning.
    Note: Stick insect being thin, it makes it extremely hard for people without doujutsu to see him coming. (thought it's still possible.)
    Note: The user can decide whether or not the stick insect covers his body in lightning chakra straight away or as he is travelling. (or not at all.)

    ~ Leaving for Scorps ~

    ±± Declined ±± Don't Resubmit. It copies many things already existing


    Quote Originally Posted by Erzo View Post

    (Fūton: Kase) - Wind Release: Handcuffs
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user concentrates on his wind chakra and forms a thick line of wind with two holes on each side which form around the users two wrists. The holes which fit tightly around the users wrists and the hole size can be changed by the user at will as different opponents will have different size of wrists. Furthermore the thick line of winds length can be changed by the user depending on whether the opponents hands are closer or further away from each other. This jutsu is mainly used to restrict the opponent from bringing his hands together thus preventing him from using hand seals.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.
    Note: No S-rank wind on same turn.


    ±± Declined ±± Mid range? So you can bind your opponents hands at any distance? O_o Hum, the problem i have is that the way to counter this logically is with fire, which would make the enemy burn his own hands. Make it short range and lower the rank to B.
    Resubmitting:

    (Fūton: Kase) - Wind Release: Handcuffs
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user concentrates on his wind chakra and forms a thick line of wind with two holes on each side which form around the users two wrists. The holes which fit tightly around the users wrists and the hole size can be changed by the user at will as different opponents will have different size of wrists. Furthermore the thick line of winds length can be changed by the user depending on whether the opponents hands are closer or further away from each other. This jutsu is mainly used to restrict the opponent from bringing his hands together thus preventing him from using hand seals.
    Note: Can only be used 4 times.
    Note: No S-rank wind on same turn.

    ~ Read the description carefully, you plan to handcuff yourself ? Or is it a line of wind-handcuffs that goes from your wrist to theirs ? In either case, modify the explanation. ~
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 04-24-2012 at 08:59 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (ローズ拳) Rozu Ken ; Lord Fist
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S.
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:

    Physical: The basic design of the Rozu Ken is a metal band which when worn lies over the palm and circles the hand, there are two Rozu Ken, one for each hand and both are identical in all senses. The Rozu Ken is made up of the same chakra absorbing metal that Asuma’s trench knives are and work in a similar way.

    Ability: The bands can absorb and redistribute the Chakra of the user causing a chakra coat around the fists.


    The users hand and lower arm is covered in Chakra which enhances the power and strength on all the Taijutsu attacks of that said user. The power of the attack depends on the rank. The higher the rank the more damage a punch can do, a Kage/Sennin user of this weapon would have the strength similar to Tsunade’s chakra control punches able to shatter the ground of a large area or shatter the bones in an enemy’s arm while a S-Jounin user of the Rozu Ken would be able to break a single large rock or break the arm of the enemy in two halves. The main usage of this weapon is when used in conjunction with Taijutsu to enhance power.

    Elemental usage: Once the user of the Rozu Ken has mastered an element the user can apply the element to the Chakra which is being absorbed by the band.

    Fuuton: By channeling Fuuton chakra into the bands, two waves of wind are made around the band. One on the left, and one on the right side. Whenever the opponent kicks or punches, the user can use these waves to let the attacks slip off, meaning the attack doesn't connect and the user is imbalanced.

    Raiton: By focusing raiton chakra into the bands, and releasing it at once, the user's attack becomes much faster and more powerful, due to the sudden outburst. If it connects, the opponent is briefly numbed in the place it connected.

    Katon: By focusing Katon chakra into the bands, the user creates 3 small flaming spikes that come out of the front of the band. These spikes, when connecting to the opponent, penetrate the skin a little bit, and cause the skin of the opponent to be burned, as well as the penetrated flesh.

    Doton: The user, when focusing Doton chakra into the band, creates a block of stone around his hand, increasing the power due to the punch, though decreasing the users speed slightly. This can also be used to block incoming up to C-rank taijutsu attacks.

    Suiton: Each fist is coated in a think substance, if the users hands come in contact with the enemy, the substance bonds the users hand with the part of the body it has contact with allowing for follow up attacks. This lasts for the enemies next turn or if the enemy can detach themselves.

    Note: Can only be used three times per fight.
    Note: Only one element can be used per fight.
    Note: Each usage of the weapon lasts 2 turns.

    ~ Oh, this is a weapon ? I almost didn't realize that. No, no one is gaining Tsunade-level strength whatever the case. That's the first of a few issues I ave, and the major one, so fix that, resubmit and we'll see. ~
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    Shinigami Reaper (japanese/english name is same for this sword)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Once the two Giant Death Gods, one from Heaven, and one from Hell were fightning for a holy sword named "Shinigami Reaper", since it was sword who stated that the winner will be the weilder of it. So even after their 100th fight, the result was the same, Draw. Since none of them was the winner and they do not wanted to give it to their opponent. So they, along with the sword decided to give the sword to someone else. And than they met Enzup, both of them tried to kill him, but couldn't be succeeded. So they liked his true braveness, skills, and mastery in fightning. So they bestowned the sword on Enzup, in hope that he is the one capable of holding it, but the sword was the one who had to chose his master himself, it was upto the sword that it would accept him or not, but the sword was the one who liked Enzup the most and decided to help him conquer anything he wants.
    Since the sword was of those Giant Gods, so its size is also very big. The hilt itself is of 2m height, and the blade is of 3m height making a total lenght of 5m, and its cross guard is of 1m length, while the blade is of half meter. It is a double-edged sword. And have a little curvature in the edge part and pointed on front. It also have a very long chain tied to pommel part. The blade is bloody red in colour which is supposed to be the blood of millions of people killed by it. It also has 2 black strips originating from the rain guard to some extent on blade, and it was supposed to be the curse of people died from it. Its original weight is 1 ton but only for Enzup its 1 kg.

    Abilities:
    -This sword is indestructible and have enormous amount of chakra.
    -It has life of its own just like samehada and thus it can react on its own when required.
    -It can cut and slice through anything just like butter.
    -When Chakra is passed to the sword, than the hilt remains the same but the blade transforms to |Fire- Phoenix|, |Water-Shark|, |Earth- Dragon|, |Lightning- Snakes|, |Wind- Porcupine|

    Restrictions:
    -Passing any chakra to the sword, counts as a move, which is equivalent to S-rank Offense/Defense/Supplementary.
    -Can channel chakra to the sword only once per turn.
    -The sword can only transform in the animals listed above, and only when user passes chakra to it, not on its own.
    -If user gets hit by a jutsu while holding this sword, than he will receive an addition of +10 damage points.
    -The sword can only be wielded by Enzup. If someone else even touches the sword or any part of it, then it will paralyze him completely unless he drops it.


    Made it S-rank, removed the sensing ability, and completly removed the last ability paragraph (which was almost same as abilities). Also removed the ability "-The sword can anytime increase or decrease its weight from 1 ton to 1 Kg." Also removed the part "Superlight weight that allows him to use it more fluently and reaction time of user while using the sword is much less than of anyone else using a sword."

    ±± Leaving for another mod as i still wouldn't approve this ±±
    Declined. This sword needs alot of work. I'm not going to say "Do Not Resubmit" but the concept of the sword needs to be completely redone because right now its unapprovable. lets hit this one by one.

    -You say it has enourmous amounts of chakra. How much chakra does it have? why is that important? what does it do with this chakra?
    -I'm not going to allow the sword to move around like Samaheda. Your sword is built like a piece of metal, Samaheda is built like a fish.
    -"It can cut and slice through anything like butter" Does this include jutsu, mountains, diamond? That statement is too ambiguous and leaves it open for exploitation.
    -what is the significance of the blade transforming? do the animals move? does they do anything other than just stay on the blade?
    -If the blade can perform S-ranked offensive and defensive moves then there needs to be a limit of how many times this can be done.
    -getting hit with +10 damage really doesnt mean much. its like getting punched in the arm. yeah it hurts but doesnt really matter.
    -If the paralysis was the only part of the sword it MIGHT have a chance of being approved, but having it stacked on top of everything else, theres no way I'm allowing it.

    You've managed to write alot, but not really tell us anything about what the sword does, at least nothing significant. the abilities are generalized and need to be detailed more.

    From now on keep the swords history in your bio and leave it out of the weapon description. I dont want to have to read a book before I even know what the sword does.

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    Shinigami Reaper (japanese/english name is same for this sword)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The sword was made by ancient priests of hell and heaven at a sacred place by using hairs, bones, skin, blood and senses of a living shinigami himself which gave the sword life and transforming ability. The sword was named after the shinigami. And it is believed that the shinigami is living in the form of sword now.
    The size of the sword is very big. The hilt itself is of 2m height, and the blade is of 3m height making a total length of 5m, and its cross guard is of 1m length, while the blade is of half meter. It is a double-edged sword. And have a little curvature in the edge part and pointed on front. The sword is quite thick but the whole blade is covered with the hairs of shinigami which are sharper than diamond, which gives it ablity to cut and slice through any solid. All of its senses are almost covered with hairs on blade, It also have a very long chain tied to pommel part. The blade is bloody red in colour which is supposed to be the blood of millions of people killed by it and of shinigami himself. It also has 2 black strips originating from the rain guard to some extent on blade, and it was supposed to be the curse of people died from it. Its original weight is 1 ton but only for Enzup its 1 kg.

    Abilities:
    -This sword is indestructible and have high amount of chakra.
    -It has life of its own just like samehada and thus it can react on its own when required.
    -It can cut and slice through anything solid just like butter.
    -When Chakra is passed to the sword, then the chain remains the same but the sword transforms to |Fire- Phoenix|, |Water-Shark|, |Earth- Dragon|, |Lightning- Snakes|, |Wind- Porcupine|

    Restrictions:
    -Passing any chakra to the sword, counts as a move, which is equivalent to S-rank Offense/Defense/Supplementary.
    -Can channel chakra to the sword only once per turn. Can't transform to same animal 2 times in a row.
    -The sword can only transform in the animals listed above, and only when user passes chakra to it, not on its own.
    -If user gets hit by a jutsu while holding this sword, then he will receive an addition of +20 damage points.
    -The sword can only be wielded by Enzup. If someone else even touches the sword or any part of it, then it will paralyze him completely unless he drops it.
    The sword SOMEWHAT looks like this


    -Since it will be having life of its own so it will require chakra of its own. Changed the word from "enormous" to "high" amount of chakra. Also I am planning on making jutsus of sword, so it'll need some chakra.

    -Added a line where it states that how it got life. Also, don't think that hairs and skin are too soft so how can sword be indestructible. Its b'coz strength of hairs and skin differs from specie to specie. Like horse's hairs are as sharp as pin.. rhino's skin..etc etc. (just reminding )

    -No it can't cut through jutsus of water, wind, lightning and fire. As they are not SOLID, but that of Earth. Also what if someone tries to cut water with a sword? water can't be cut, sword will just pass through water. Same goes for fire, wind and lightning. And bout earth I believe there are not much earth jutsus which can be cut, as MOST of them takes place below us. Added a sentence about it. Also it can't cut through mountains, sometimes size also matters. Like a bullet is meant to kill a living being, so it can kill a human, but what about a dinosaur.

    -To be true, I added the transforming ability for fun in RP. But I really want it. Also I may create future jutsus, like when sword is in the form of porcupine (wind), then it can shoot spikes from its body or something like that (didn't thought of it much)

    -Blade/Sword can't perform any S-Ranked jutsus as of now, as I stated above, I will create jutsus in future if this CW gets approved. And on basis of Rank I will limit the usage of jutsus. And if you're talking about transformation part itself, then there is already a restriction about its limit that it can only be done only once every turn.

    -1 punch doesn't hurt much, but punches many times can lead to hospital.lol.. Changed it to +20. Also its not that like I am punched or something. I mean its not like just 10 DP, or 20 DP. Because I am just not getting only 10 or 20 damage. I am getting plus20 damage to any jutsu which is used on me. Like A-Rank (60 DP) when hits me, I will receive (60 + 20 = 80) equivalent to S-rank. Here this +20 DP worked as an A-Rank, coz it turned my enemy's A-Rank to S-Rank (A-Rank + A-Rank = S-Rank). Means here this +20 will be equal to the rank of the jutsu which my opponent uses on me.

    -I added the paralyzation part so that even if someone kills me in a battle with killing/stealing allowed, then he can't steal my CW even if he wants to, coz my sword will paralyze him, forcing him to drop it.

    I hope I cleared what sword can do. Also the main abilities will be its future jutsus which I will make in future. And I also hope that I've explained well, and if not then plz tell me on which part(s) I should focus more. And about the history part, I removed my whole history And replced it with suitable and small history which explains why sword have life of its own. And yes I will add my previous sword's history to my bio.


    ±± Leaving for Scary ±± Just a reminder though, that you can't pick who checks your cjs. Avoid doing such things in the future.

    Declined.

    Some parts are still too ambiguous and you have too many abilities rolled into one sword. Since you want the transformations to be the main ability, get rid of the paralysis part completely. You need to put a set limit on how much chakra is in the sword, and I'm talking numbers, not words "enourmous" and "high" which have varying amounts based on peoples opinion (that substitution irritated me because you didnt change aything. you might as well have put a troll face on it). Take the whole "can cut through anything solid like butter" out. Its too ambiguous still and will lead to misuse. Word to the wise, dont put too many powers into it or it will be DNR'ed. Right now the sword is resembling more of a bypass for a custom summon, which I would not allow.


    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    Shinigami Reaper (japanese/english name is same for this sword)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A (+10 to kenjutsu)
    Description: The sword was made by ancient priests of hell and heaven at a sacred place by using hairs, bones, skin, blood and senses of a living shinigami himself which gave the sword life and transforming ability. The sword was named after the shinigami. And it is believed that the shinigami is living in the form of sword now.
    The size of the sword is very big. The hilt itself is of 2m height, and the blade is of 3m height making a total length of 5m, and its cross guard is of 1m length, while the blade is of half meter. It is a double-edged sword. And have a little curvature in the edge part and pointed on front. The sword is quite thick but the whole blade is covered with the hairs of shinigami which are very sharp, sharper than normal katana. All of its senses are almost covered with hairs on blade. It also have a very long chain tied to pommel part. The blade is bloody red in colour which is supposed to be the blood of millions of people killed by it and of shinigami himself. It also has 2 black strips originating from the rain guard to some extent on blade, and it was supposed to be the curse of people died from it. Its original weight is 1 ton but only for Enzup its 1 kg.

    Abilities:
    -This sword is indestructible and have Kage Ranked chakra (1400 chakra points)
    -It has life of its own just like samehada and thus it can react on its own when required.
    -When Chakra is passed to the sword, then the chain remains the same but the sword transforms to |Fire- Phoenix|, |Water-Shark|, |Earth- Dragon|, |Lightning- Snakes|, |Wind- Porcupine|

    Restrictions:
    -Passing any chakra to the sword, counts as a move, which is equivalent to S-rank Offense/Defense/Supplementary.
    -Can channel chakra to the sword only once per turn. Can't transform to same animal 2 times in a row.
    -The sword can only transform in the animals listed above, and only when user passes chakra to it, not on its own.
    -If user gets hit by a jutsu while holding this sword, then he will receive an addition of +20 damage points.
    -The sword only listens to Enzup.
    The sword SOMEWHAT looks like this


    Completely removed the paralysis part. Added chakra in numbers. Removed the ability to cut and slice through solid. Added small parts in Bold.
    Anything else of which I should take care sir ^_^

    ±± Declined ±± Define the animals, how long they last, what can they do, etc etc. It transforms into a phoenix with fire....ok...and? Also the part about one ton and what not, remove it. Takte the chakra of it completely out. Even if it has chakra and is a living sending thing, no need to compare it to ninja, otherwise it becomes also vulnerable to Genjutsu and other effects. Add a note stating clearly that this sword can't sense chakra.
    1.) Shinigami Reaper (japanese/english name is same for this sword)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A (+10 to kenjutsu)
    Description: The sword was made by ancient priests of hell and heaven at a sacred place by using hairs, bones, skin, blood and senses of a living shinigami himself which gave the sword life and transforming ability. The sword was named after the shinigami. And it is believed that the shinigami is living in the form of sword now.
    The size of the sword is very big. The hilt itself is of 2m height, and the blade is of 3m height making a total length of 5m, and its cross guard is of 1m length, while the blade is of half meter. It is a double-edged sword. And have a little curvature in the edge part and pointed on front. The sword is quite thick but the whole blade is covered with the hairs of shinigami which are very sharp, sharper than normal katana. All of its senses are almost covered with hairs on blade. It also have a very long chain tied to pommel part. The blade is bloody red in colour which is supposed to be the blood of millions of people killed by it and of shinigami himself. It also has 2 black strips originating from the rain guard to some extent on blade, and it was supposed to be the curse of people died from it.

    Abilities:
    -This sword is indestructible and have 1400 chakra points.
    -It has life of its own just like samehada and thus it can react on its own when required.
    -When Chakra is passed to the sword, then the chain remains the same but the sword transforms to |Fire- Phoenix|, |Water-Shark|, |Earth- Dragon|, |Lightning- Snakes|, |Wind- Porcupine|
    -The sword only listens to Enzup.

    Restrictions:
    -Passing any chakra to the sword, counts as a move, which is equivalent to S-rank Offense/Defense/Supplementary.
    -Transformation lasts for a maximum of 4 turns.
    -If opponent's chakra neutralizes or overcomes the animal's chakra (when transformed), then the transformed animal will come to his normal form again. i.e. in sword form.
    -Can channel chakra to the sword only once per turn. Can't transform to same animal 2 times in a row.
    -The sword can only transform in the animals listed above, and only when user passes chakra to it, not on its own.
    -If user gets hit by a jutsu while holding this sword, then he will receive an addition of +20 damage points.
    -Sword cannot sense chakra. lol

    Removed the 1 ton part. Added a note stating that my sword cannot sense chakra. Since you said "Even if it has chakra and is a living sending thing, no need to compare it to ninja" and SY wanted my sword to have chakra in numbers, so I removed the "Kage Ranked" part and kept the chakra in numbers. Moved the line "Only listens to Enzup" from restrictions to Abilities.
    As of the transformation part. Lets say I pass my wind chakra in the sword, my sword transforms to porcupine. Then I can shoot spikes from porcupine's body. (future jutsu, if this CW gets approved). Meaning, after my sword will transform into an animal, sword will use some special techniques which can be used by that special animal in the transformation. eg: porcupine-spikes.
    About lasting, added a note about its lasting. And lets say my sword is in the form of phoenix (fire) which is equivalent to S-Rank, so any water technique of A-Rank can bring back my phoenix to sword form. Or if a B-Rank water is used on it, then sword's strength decreases to A-Rank. But overall the transformation lasts 4 turns.

    If you have more doubts, then ask me. I will explain them in more detailed manner. And if you want something change, then let me know ^_^



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    2.) (Terrapin Mo-Do) - Terrapin Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User starts concentrating on his terrapin chakra. Once concentrated enough, he releases that chakra throughout his body and thus entering into Terrapin Mode. After entering into the mode user gains some of the terrapin's features and properties; user's body becomes very tough and dark in color just like of terrapin's back shell which gives the user -20 to any technique he gets hit with. He start looking like a terrapin. User becomes lively underwater and thus water jutsus upto B-Rank don't have any effect on him. His speed and reflexes also increases which is equivalent to naruto in sage mode, but comparatively little bit slower. Due to terrapin's chakra flowing in user's body, user gets immune to S-Rank normal and A-Rank Doujutsu genjutsus.
    Note: -Mode lasts 4 turns.
    -User gives +20 to water ninjutsu and -20 to fire ninjutsu.
    -Once the Terrapin mode wears off, user can't use it again for next 4 turns.
    -Can only be used if user has signed "Terrapin" contract.
    -Can only be used by Enzup.

    You can remove the genjutsu part, if you think my mode is OP in this form.

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    3.) (Ninpou: Mitsukai Tsubasa) - Ninja Art: Angelic Wings
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: User uses his ink brush to draw giant wings on his back. Once drawn, it appears like the wings are emerging out of user's back and gives user somewhat angelic look and flying ability. Because of giant size of wings, user can fly with very great speed which is equivalent to Rock Lee without weights.
    Note: -Must know Ink ninjutsu.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.



    @Above tech: There are many ink ninjutsu which helps the user in flying for infinite amount of time (see spoiler below). Also user can create many birds, dragons and animals at a time. And I am creating just one thing. Also other ink ninjutsu can be used any no. of times. So I am just making a new ink custom which resembles other ink ninjutsu completely.. which is for fun..
    Also there are not many people who possess ink ability on nb, and those who possess they "don't have a similar custom."
    You can remove the great speed (lee without weights) part if you want..

    (Ninpou: Choujuu Giga) - Ninja Art Beast Imitation
    Rank: C
    Type:Supplementary/Attack
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:15(-3 for each additional animal created)
    Damage Points:30
    Description:The user draws out small animals that can attack(lions), bind(snakes),and allow the user to fly(birds).This jutsu consists of 5 small animals.The pictures can be pre-drawn but you must open the scroll.
    Note:The 5 animal limit can be any variety of small animals.

    (Ninpou: Chou Choujuu Giga) - Ninja Art: Super Beast Imitation
    Rank:B
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:20(-6 for each additional large animal past 3 or -3 for each small animal past 10)
    Damage Points:40
    Description:This is a more powerful version of beast imitation.The user can create huge animals.This can range form 3 huge dragons or 10 small animals.The pictures can be pre-drawn but you must open the scroll.



    ±± All Declined ±±It has been stated countless times before, by Izuna and not only him that no submission that uses Spoilers without them being for images or videos will be checked.

    As stated in the first post of this thread:

    "-No submission that uses font or formatting alterations such as underline, bold, allignement, color, size, spoilers, etc will be checked. The only exception is that you are allowed to Bold or underline the title of each technique you submitt and you can use spoilers for videos or images you need to post for references.

    -An exception to the above rule is the requirement to bold the alterations on re-submissions. Its required that every altered or add part is bolded. If you simply take out something, write beneath the jutsu stating "I took out the part where..."."
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 04-23-2012 at 08:43 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Raiton:Howaito Raikiri)White Lightning Blade
    Type:Weapon (sword)
    Rank:B
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:N/A (20 when you add Raiton chakra )
    Damage:40
    Description:The White Lightning Blade has a rumor of being forged with a fang of the nine tailed beast Kurama using white lightning to cut it into smaller pieces capable of being manipulated. This sword at first appears dull, rusty, and at first glance useless, this is called V1 form

    when you add Raiton chakra into the blade it grows to a massive size and gives off tiny bolts of lightning causing fractures on the sword , this is called V2 form


    Note:
    The white lightning blade can only be used 3 times per battle

    Note:When the white lightning blade is in its v2 from it can only stay like that for 3 turns, and then it reverts to it's v1 state

    Note:There is a 2 turn cool down after used, meaning if used in v2 sate and you take it out or it reverts back to it's V1 state you have to wait 2 turns before you can use it in V2 form again.

    NoteWhen the white lightning blade is in it's V2 form it is the size of zabuza's Executioner's Blade

    Note:
    When the white lightning blade is in it's V2 form it can cut Steele

    ~ So..this sword, for all its forms and things, only has the power to cut steel ? How is it different from thousands of custom weapons that can do that AND something else ? Declined. ~

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    (Raiton:sono Howaito jajjimento)Lightning release:The white judgement
    Type:Attack
    Rank:B
    Range:Short-Mid-Long
    Chakra:20
    Damage:40-20-10
    Description:The user chanel their raiton charka into a sword, and then the user swings the sword sending out a powerful wave of white lightning blots at their opponent.The damage changes with the range ..In close range the wave of lightning bolts starts out as a single actuate powerful bolt of lightning capable of cutting Steele , then once the wave of lightning travels into mid range the single bolt starts to spread out into four bolts but the wave lowers in power, now only capable of cutting solid rock, when it travels into long range the wave of lighting splits again the time in half, now having eight bolts of lightning capable of only stunning a person(s), with no real harm only stunning them for 3 seconds

    Note:When the wave of white lightning bolts are in close range it is 1 yard in width ( 3 feet ), when in mid range the wave of white lightning is 2 yards in width (6 feet), when the wave of white lightning is in long range the width is three yards ( 9 feet)

    Note:Once every three times jutsu is used it cannot not be used again until four turns.(if you use this justu 3 times regardless of if it's in the same turn it cannot be used again untill the fourth turn after the last time used )

    Note: This can only be used two times per battle(the most you can use this is 3 times in one turn and three four turns later.. so six or once every turn for three turns , and and then for turns later )

    Note:Can only be used with white lightning blade V2

    ~ Declined, get the sword approved first. ~

    Note to mod checking: if you need to change anything to approve it please do it
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 04-24-2012 at 02:13 AM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Sage of Darkness View Post
    Raiton Kuchiyose Feza arashi kujo Summoning Lightning style Feather Storm Destruccion
    Type: Summoning/Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 25
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will the follwing hand seals (Tiger>Boar>Ox>Rooster>Snake) and slam his hand on the ground. After doing so a flock of Blue Jays covered in Lightning will appear and charge at the opponent. Causing Paralizes and Damage.
    -Note-
    Can only be used by those who have signed the Blue Jay Contract
    Can Only Be Taught by Sage of Darkness
    Can only be used twice in a Battle

    ±± Declined ±± Work the description a bit better, its messy.





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    Katon Kuchiyose Enkou Feza arashi Summoning fire style Flame Feather Storm
    Type: Offensive/Summoning
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra:25
    Damage:40
    Description: The user will make the follwing Hand seals (Snake>Rooster>Ox>Boar>Tiger) After doing so he will slam his hands on the ground summoning a flock of Blue Jays covered in flames. Those Blue Jays will Head towards the enemy and strike them thus creating several burns and damage.

    -Note-
    Can Only be used by those who signed the Blue Jay Contract
    Can only be taught by Sage of Darkness
    Can Only be used twice in battle

    ±± Declined ±± Same issue as with the lightning one


    Link to Contract Signing

    Resumitting

    Raiton Kuchiyose Feza arashi kujo Summoning Lightning style Feather Storm Destruccion
    Type: Summoning/Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 25
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will the follwing hand seals (Tiger>Boar>Ox>Rooster>Snake) and slam his hand on the ground, summoning flock of 20 small Blue Jays covered in Lightning will appear and charge at the opponent,causing Paralysis and numbness. These Birds together have the same properties as Chidori. Aftter Hitting the opponent, or being stopped, they go away like a normal summon
    -Note-
    Can only be used by those who have signed the Blue Jay Contract
    Can Only Be Taught by Sage of Darkness
    Can only be used twice in a Battle
    -SideNote- I edited The whole description hope its better now.

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    Katon Kuchiyose Enkou Feza arashi Summoning fire style Flame Feather Storm
    Type: Offensive/Summoning
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra:25
    Damage:40
    Description: The user will make the follwing Hand seals (Snake>Rooster>Ox>Boar>Tiger) and slam his hand on the ground summoning a flock of 20 small Blue Jays covered in fire. Those blue Jays will then appear and charge at the opponent causing him a slight burn and damaging him. After being hit or stoped they will go away like a normal summon

    -Note-
    Can Only be used by those who signed the Blue Jay Contract
    Can only be taught by Sage of Darkness
    Can Only be used twice in battle

    -Side Note-
    Edited the whole description in this one 2 ^^

    ~ Leaving for Scorps ~


    ±± Both Approved ±± Sorry about that
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 04-25-2012 at 07:19 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Dropping this weapon [x]

    輝けるの海 | Kinkai Kyakuin | Seas of Rhye
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    The "Seas of Rhye" are a twin pair of hatchets that were used on a ancient vessel known as "The Maelstrom". Whereabouts unknown the mighty ship sank to the bottom of the ocean somewhere in between "Nagi Island" and "Tea Country". For years the ship was a host to the underwater world until one day about 100 years later. On the coast of the "Lightning Country" a strange cast iron chest was found by a young chuunin by the name of "Levy". She has always been fond with the sea and often spend her days watching off the cliffs. Levy found the chest at the bottom of the rocky shore, when she opened this sunken treasure the two hatchets laid at the bottom with a note. Levy too this day is unable to translate the note but with what happened when she wielded the hatchets leaves her to wonder the origin of these treasures. Hatchets are both a close range weapon as well as a throwing weapon. These weapons are linked to Levys chakra meaning when she throws it a boomerang effects takes place in which it comes back to Levys chakra. These hatchets increase her Suiton techniques to some extent.

    Abilities:
    1. Hatchets linked to users chakra
    2. Hatchets can be thrown
    3. Able to deflect 1 lightning attack A-Rank and below
    4. Increases Water Release: Gushing Water Imprisonment by 1 rank
    5. Increases Water Style: Water shark bomb by 2 ranks
    6. When a hatchet is thrown in water from the point of impact a large wave appears that can be controlled with the other hatchet
    7. If one of the hatchets chop the ground it brings up water to create a water source.


    Restrictions:
    1. Only usable by Coyote
    2. Deflect counts as a technique
    3. Hatchet creating wave counts as technique
    4. Hatchet creates water counts as a technique
    5. Must have Suiton Mastery


    ~ I don't want so much history, pare it down to make using and checking the technique easy. Also, there has to be a time limit to the increase in rank, otherwise you can just spam Forbidden-rank Water Shark Bomb or whatever. ~
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 04-24-2012 at 02:21 AM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Wander In Fear: Eye Destruction Technique (Samayoeru nai Yuugu: Kujogan no Jutsu)
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long (sight of target)
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-15 per turn active)
    Damage: 80
    Description: This technique was developed by an unknown shinobi. The shinobi having encountered several shinobi baring the rare dojutsu of the land, developed this incredibly effective technique which would lay waste to their dojutsu. In this technique the shinobi will clap his hands together channeling his chakra into his opponent. The victim will then experience an agonizing headache as they feel as their equilibrium is thrown off and they loose balance and as the headache phases them they will find themselves loosing their vision. The caster disrupts his opponent's chakra in such a way to imitate the rare disease known as Agnosia. The caster of this technique disrupts the chakra in their opponent's brain which controls their sense of perception and interpretation. Once the technique is cast, the affects of the jutsu will result in the victim being unable to interpret, comprehend, or understand what they're eyes see and take in, essentially blinding them. The sense of sight is still there but the victim has no way of processing what they see. The pain from the headache the victims feel as well is the more prevalent item in their mind, which takes the victims focus away from their other senses. The other senses still retained in the victim are not weakened in anyway however their mind's focus on the pain they are experiencing makes it more difficult for them to focus on their other senses they possess.
    ~This jutsu requires the caster to have vision of their opponent in order for this technique to work.
    ~if cast successfully, this jutsu lasts a total of four turns
    ~This technique can only be used twice per battle
    ~Due to the focus of this technique the user cannot use any other genjutsu while this is in play nor can they use any genjutsu above B-ranked for the next two turns after the jutsu has worn off or been released
    ~As this technique blocks the minds processing ability in regards to sight, all those capable of seeing are affected, dojutsu users included.
    ~Can only be taught by Reborn
    ~This jutsu only works on people of the same rank as the caster. Genjutsu specialists will be able to cast 1 rank above.

    Note: Co-Created/Inspired by Lili-Chwan. If it's okay, I'd like allow her to use it if you deem this approvable, even though I'm not a Sensei.If not, she's fine with me having the jutsu by myself until I meet the necessary requirements to pass it to her.


    ~ Declined, do not resubmit. ~
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 04-24-2012 at 02:20 AM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Kira.. View Post
    (Roshida Jutsu: Tenshi no Uta) - Roshida Jutsu: Song of the Angels
    Type: Genjutsu; Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user sings a beautiful song clouded with Roshida chakra that causes the opponent to fall asleep and hallucinate that they are still completing the task they were previously occupying themselves with. Their body goes numb, meaning minor wounds will not be felt.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~The user will not be able to use A-Rank or Above Genjutsu for the remainder of the battle.
    ~The user cannot use any other Roshida jutsu in the same turn.
    ~Can only be used by a hummingbird or a human in Roshida Mode.

    ±± Declined ±± This is still too powerful. Sound genjutsu is basically unblock able for the most part as as long as there is sound, even if you produce pain, the genjutsu sets upon the enemy again unless the source of the sound is dealt with and this one is seriously overpowered. You make your opponent sleep while he thinks nothing is happening differently than when he was awake and yet you also numb his body so minor things can't break the genjutsu, You also make this Long range and yet the restrictions barely restrict you. Sorry, but again, tone the technique down.


    (Hachidori Jutsu: Genesis) - Hummingbird Jutsu: Genesis
    Type: Summoning; Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user creates a larger and longer-ranged version of Hachidori Hands that is more closely related to a summoning than a unique jutsu. The user performs a single hand seal, and a large bird head with its beak opened emerges from the ground, defending the user or ensnaring the target. The beak of the bird is extremely thick and strong, like that of Kaguya bone, however easily succumbs to an equal or greater strength attack.
    ~Can only be used once per battle, and cannot be used in conjunction with another summon that is activated in the same turn.
    ~Can be used on land, water, or in air.
    ~Cannot be used after the user has exited Roshida mode, but can be used during Roshida Mode.

    ±± Declined ±± Are you summoning the hummingbird? Or is this a technique? the description is confusing


    (Roshida Jutsu: Exodus) - Roshida Jutsu: Exodus
    Type: Summoning; Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: In this "form" of Hachidori Hands, the user takes a completely different method. As opposed to creating a beak or head, the user creates wing in the form of a bird attached to their back, making the user capable of flight after performing the bird hand seal.
    ~Can only be used for a maximum of five turns.
    ~The wings are strong in the sense that they act like an extension of the users body, like a sword wielded in the users arm. As a result, there may be a delay in the amount of time the user can react to certain movements due to their sheer size and attachment rather than spontaneous growth.
    ~The user cannot use any form of Hachidori Hands - including Hummingbird Jutsu: Genesis - while using this jutsu.
    ~This jutsu counts as a summon, and can only be used once per battle, due to the fact Roshida Mode can only be used once per battle.
    ~Can only be used by a human in Roshida Mode.


    ±± Declined ±± Same as above. Also, it would help if you quote or link this "Hachidori Hands"
    Hachidori hands and an Explanation of the Technique:

    Hummingbird Hands (Hachidori no Te)
    Rank: C
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user unleashes the beak of a hummingbird (that is very sharp) from their sleeve. The beak can open to grab the target.
    ~The user must sign the Hummingbird contract.

    ---

    Hachidori Hands was a technique inspired by Orochimaru's Hidden Shadow Snake Hands. While the main variation between the techniques is the species used, the Hummingbirds pierce and grab rather than simply bite onto the target. Other variations of Hachidori hands have been created, however they all derive from this central technique. Sorry for the spoiler, I wanted to keep this separate from the techniques. Hope this clears things up for you.


    (Hachidori Jutsu: Genesis) - Hummingbird Jutsu: Genesis
    Type: Summoning; Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user creates a larger and longer-ranged version of Hachidori Hands that is more closely related to a summoning than a unique jutsu. The user performs a single hand seal, and a large bird head with its beak opened emerges from the ground, defending the user or ensnaring the target. The beak of the bird is extremely thick and strong, like that of Kaguya bone, however easily succumbs to an equal or greater strength attack.
    ~Can only be used once per battle, and cannot be used in conjunction with another summon that is activated in the same turn.
    ~Can be used on land, water, or in air.
    ~Cannot be used after the user has exited Roshida mode, but can be used during Roshida Mode.

    ~ How big is the beak exactly ? ~

    (Roshida Jutsu: Exodus) - Roshida Jutsu: Exodus
    Type: Summoning; Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: In this "form" of Hachidori Hands, the user takes a completely different method. As opposed to creating a beak or head, the user creates wing in the form of a bird attached to their back, making the user capable of flight after performing the bird hand seal.
    ~Can only be used for a maximum of five turns.
    ~The wings are strong in the sense that they act like an extension of the users body, like a sword wielded in the users arm. As a result, there may be a delay in the amount of time the user can react to certain movements due to their sheer size and attachment rather than spontaneous growth.
    ~The user cannot use any form of Hachidori Hands - including Hummingbird Jutsu: Genesis - while using this jutsu.
    ~This jutsu counts as a summon, and can only be used once per battle, due to the fact Roshida Mode can only be used once per battle.
    ~Can only be used by a human in Roshida Mode.

    ~ The sentence I underlined makes absolutely no sense. It's both an extension of your body and something that slows you down ? Generally, when a sword is called an extension of your body, it means that the sword is used instinctively and with as much ease as a normal arm, not something that is bulky and causes slow responses. ~


    (Roshida Jutsu: Tenshi no Uta) - Roshida Jutsu: Song of the Angels
    Type: Genjutsu; Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short to Close Mid-Ranged
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user sings a beautiful song clouded with Roshida chakra that causes the opponent to fall asleep and hallucinate that they are still completing the task they were previously occupying themselves with. Their body goes numb, meaning minor wounds will not be felt. The song ends after the target is ensnared.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~The user will not be able to use A-Rank or Above Genjutsu for the remainder of the battle.
    ~The user cannot use any other Roshida jutsu in the same turn.
    ~Can only be used by a hummingbird or a human in Roshida Mode.

    ~ What is Roshida chakra ? If its some special ability gained by you via some other jutsu, please quote that technique when you submit something based off it. ~
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Sōgyo no Kotowari)- Law of the Twin Fish
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Mid/Long Range(s)
    Chakra: 40 Chakra When ability used.
    Damage: 80 Damage, varies with the force of the technique.
    Description:
    It's two swords tied together by a red rope with 5 charms hanging of it, Sōgyo no Kotowari is able to absorb an opponent's Elemental attacks through the left sword by infusing either Lightning or Fire chakra of his own (depending of the nature of the technique) into the sword and directs the attack through the connecting rope where the five charms on the rope strengthens and accelerates the attack faster than it was originally fired and reverses its original course firing the same attack from the right sword, at the opponent making it much more difficult for the opponent to dodge, however do to needing constant chakra into it for the technique to work, it can only absorb and throw back, B-rank and lower Fire & Lightning Techniques.
    Looks:

    *Note: Special Ability can be used 4 times per Battle.
    *Note: Only Gildarts can weild this Weapon.

    ~ How much does it strengthen it ? Also, the absorb and release has to count as one technique ~
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 04-24-2012 at 02:55 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Ushiro View Post
    Editing the above technique that was previously approved to this. Most of the description is changed but only related to its form:

    (Sogeki no Geijutsu: Buruzuai)- Sniper Art: Bullseye
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (-5 each turn)
    Damage: N/A (+15 to kyujutsu and Sniper techniques, -10 to other ninjutsu)
    Description: The user imbues large amounts of chakra into his bow which causes it to glow and release a pulse of chakra that is manifested as a barrier in the shape of a dome with the bow at the center. The barrier is one-sided, meaning the user can be protected from outside attacks and objects can leave the barrier freely. When the user aims his bow, a crosshair appears on the surface of the barrier and the arrows that pass through it are strengthened. A variation of this technique is performed by aiming the user's bow at a target and create the barrier around them instead in a reversed state so he can be trapped inside while the user attacks him from outside. The dome remains stationary when trapping a target.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -Lasts for 2 turns
    -Can protect the user from 3 C-rank, 2 B-rank, or 1 A-rank attack
    ~Declined~ I like the new idea (the trap), but it's an A-rank technique. How exactly should a small web be able to block B-rank techniques (2, no less)?
    The original:
    (Sogeki no Geijutsu: Buruzuai)- Sniper Art: Bullseye
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (-5 each turn)
    Damage: N/A (+10 to kyujutsu and Sniper techniques, -10 to other ninjutsu)
    Description: The user imbues large amounts of chakra into his bow which manifests a web-like crosshair in front. It acts as a barrier against frontal attacks and strengthens arrows shot from the bow with once they pass through the one-sided barrier.
    -Usable once per battle
    -Lasts for 4 turns
    -Can protect the user from 3 C-rank, 2 B-rank, or 1 A-rank attack
    -Only 2 jutsu per turn may be used while this is active excluding the turn it was used
    (Sogeki no Geijutsu: Buruzuai)- Sniper Art: Bullseye
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (-5 each turn)
    Damage: N/A (+15 to kyujutsu and Sniper techniques, -10 to other ninjutsu)
    Description: The user imbues large amounts of chakra into his bow which causes it to glow and release a pulse of chakra that is manifested as a barrier in the shape of a dome with the bow at the center. The barrier is one-sided, meaning the user can be protected from outside attacks and objects can leave the barrier freely. When the user aims his bow, a crosshair appears on the surface of the barrier and the arrows that pass through it are strengthened. A variation of this technique is performed by aiming the user's bow at a target and create the barrier around them instead in a reversed state so he can be trapped inside while the user attacks him from outside. The dome remains stationary when trapping a target.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -Lasts for 2 turns
    -The barrier can be destroyed by 3 C-rank, 2 B-rank, or 1 A-rank attack

    ~ Here's something you should think about. If the dome is formed with the bow at the centre, it might work if you use it yourself, but as a trap, it's useless as when you hold the bow in front of you and point it at the opponent, the dome will form only unidirectionally ( i.e., in front of him ) since the bow has to be at the centre, and as a result, if he just moves back he'll escape. ~


    Note- The barrier is changed from having a web shape to a dome shape.

    New:

    (Sogeki no Geijutsu: Nagareboshi)- Sniper Art: Shooting Star
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: A single arrow infused with a large amount of water chakra are shot from the user's bow at a target. Great volumes of water are then summoned from the arrow and takes the form of a rapidly spinning missile capable of causing major damage to everything in its path and flooding the area with water. By forming the seal of confrontation with one hand, the user can release numerous water arrows from the missile which will strike everything it passes by with enough force to pierce though a person's body. They can, however, be blocked by a suitable B-rank technique.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -Water arrows reach up to mid range from the missile.

    ~ Pick either the large volume of water around the arrow or the missiles, not both. ~

    (Genjutsu: Kage no Ketsugō) - Illusionary Technique: Shadow Binding
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user forms the handseals Bird -> Rat and places the opponent in a genjutsu where he sees his shadow expand in a circular fashion under him and many dark hands emerge from the circle to swiftly immobilize the opponent by grabbing him. Other hands go for the opponent's throat and begin to strangle him until he is unconscious. This technique may be mistaken for a Nara clan technique depending on who performs it.
    -Usable 2 times per battle
    -The opponent will lose consciousness the turn after he is placed in the genjutsu

    ~ You seem to lack understanding of the basic concept of Genjutsu. While it might cause unconsciousness, the point is, it is a GEN-jutsu i.e., ILLUSION technique. It cannot actually harm the opponent, leave alone cause him 60 damage points, unless it is exceptionally high ranked or used bya MS wielder or something. ~
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Kage no ha: blade of shadow) a legendary blade within the nara clan possesing incredible abilities even the greatest of naras can only dream of. when using this blade nara techs get +5 damage, also gives the ability to perform tech below

    (Shadoujanpu) Shadow jump
    Type: supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: all
    chakra cost: 20 per shadow branch
    Damage: N/A
    Description: by stabbing the blade into any shadow the user can mould into it. The ninja can then move through shadows at almost instantaneous speeds however while in the light he shows up as a dark shadow with no reason to be there and moves at normal speeds, also while moulding into/ de moulding from the shadow the ninja moves at his normal speed

    -this tech can be stopped by any fire tech S-rank or above by shooting the tech toward the shadow and forcing the ninja to return to the ground, any other fire techs will slow down the movement of the user while this techs is activated considerably same goes for flash bombs


    (Kage no suraisu) shadow slice
    type: offensive
    range: short
    chakra cost: 5
    Rank: D-rank
    Description: stabbing an opponents shadow with this sword does the same damage as it would to the opponents real body


    the shadow blade can only be used by home and people with homes permission

    the blade looks like a long scimitar with a black and gold handel with a long, pure black blade


    ±± All Declined ±± Please follow proper template for submitting techniques and weapons.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Raiton Houmen: Kyojin no Gekirin) - Lightning Release: Giant Wrath
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: Makarov exudes a constant surge of destructive lightning that surrounds him, which shakes the surrounding environment and destroys everything within the vicinity, he feels hate and anger running trough his whole body getting the relish to destroy everyone who harmed or attacked his friends, allies or himself, his eyes will become wite causing lightning currents surround him and during this state, Makarov is able to walk and while doing that, everything will get destroyed around him, every earth that touches him get's destroyed in a instant.

    Note: Every C-Ranked water technique and below will evaporate because of the high ranked water, every Water technique above that rank will be lethal for the user activating this.
    Note: Because of the high ranked lightning, not even forbidden ranked Earth technique's are able to handle the lightning currents
    Note: The user won't be able to perform any Lightning technique's the following turn after dis-activating it
    Note: -10 chakra points every turn
    ~Declined~ Totally not overpowered. Wrong rank, by the way.

    (Fearī Teiru's Iyoku Ryoku) - Fairy tail's will of power
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra: -
    Damage: -
    Description: Makarov wears a suit with Kanji symbols upon the goldish shoulders, When having the suit on, Makarov feels the energy of the Kanji symbols flow through him, and when this occurs his wind based techniques have an increase in power by 10+ making him even more deadly as a wind user, when he puts these on, he gains the power and thinks about fairy tail, warmth and strength will then flow trough his whole body and thanks to the wind kanji's written on his shoulders he gains the ability to only sweep with his hands to perform wind technique's, Makarov already got the ability to use every wind technique with one single handseal, but this also gives him the opportunity to use wind technique like Gaara does while he control's his Sand technique's. Inspiration of his guild causes him to have an aura of wind flow around him giving him wind based attacks an additional 20+ damage however, the downside is when he wears this suit, every used Fire technique will become one rank weaker then the original.

    Note: -10 chakra every turn
    Note: The bonus only applies to one attack per turn maximum
    Note: Only Jokey can wield this suit
    Note: 10+ On wind attacks or 20+ Damage on wind attacks
    Note: When using a Fire technique, the rank will lower one rank then the orginal (ex; using S-Rank Fire will become A-Rank)

    ~Declined~
    RESUBMITTING THE ABOVE SUBMITTED ONCE'S.

    (Raiton Houmen: Kyojin no Gekirin) - Lightning Release: Giant Wrath
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: Makarov exudes a constant surge of destructive lightning that surrounds him, which shakes the surrounding environment and destroys everything within the vicinity, he feels hate and anger running trough his whole body getting the relish to destroy everyone who harmed or attacked his friends, allies or himself, his eyes will become white causing lightning currents surround him and during this state, Makarov is able to walk and while doing that, everything will get destroyed around him, every earth that touches him get's destroyed in a instant.

    Note: Every C-Ranked water technique and below will evaporate because of the high ranked water, every Water technique above that rank will be lethal for the user activating this.
    Note: Because of the high ranked lightning, not even forbidden ranked Earth technique's are able to handle the lightning currents
    Note: The user won't be able to perform any Lightning technique's the following turn after dis-activating it
    Note: -10 chakra points every turn

    ~ When Roku said it was totally not overpowered, he was being sarcastic. Here, to help you out I've marked the line that's the most OP. ~

    (Fearī Teiru's Iyoku Ryoku) - Fairy tail's will of power
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra: -
    Damage: -
    Description: Makarov wears a suit with Kanji symbols upon the goldish shoulders, When having the suit on, Makarov feels the energy of the Kanji symbols flow through him, and when this occurs his wind based techniques have an increase in power by 10+ making him even more deadly as a wind user, when he puts these on, he gains powers because of the kanji's that run trough his whole body, making him more lethal if it's based for wind technique's, warmth and strength will then flow trough his whole body and thanks to the wind kanji's written on his shoulders he gains the ability to only sweep with his hands to perform wind technique's, Makarov already got the ability to use every wind technique with one single handseal, but this also gives him the opportunity to use wind technique like Gaara does while he control's his Sand technique's. (CJ'S will get submitted) Inspiration of his guild causes him to have an aura of wind flow around him giving him wind based attacks an additional 10+ damage however, the downside is when he wears this suit, every used Fire technique will become two ranks weaker then the original.

    Note: -10 chakra every turn
    Note: The bonus only applies to one attack per turn maximum
    Note: Only Makarov can wield this suit
    Note: 10+ On wind attacks or 10+ Damage on wind attacks
    Note: When using a Fire technique, the rank will lower two ranks then the orginal (ex; using S-Rank Fire will become B-Rank)
    Note: After he turns off the suit (If it get's disconnected with his body) he then won't be able to use wind and fire based technique's for the whole battle and loses -10 damage points

    ~ The first sentence I marked makes absolutely no sense, the second part won't be approved - it's too OP. ~

     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by -Yusuke- View Post
    (Raiton : Raikouhandou) - Lightning Release : Lightning Kick
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Short - Mid
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user coats either his left or right leg with lightning chakra and performs the, 'Tiger' handseal. As the handseal is done, a yellow glow is formed around the lightning chakra-infused leg and electricity will start to crackle out of it every now and then. The user drops on one hand and makes a leg sweep, which turns into a gigantic, stable whip of lightning that follows the movement of the user's leg. Unlike a regular whip, this lightning whip is firm and solid-like. The lightning whip can also be used in different types of manners instead of being a leg sweep, the user could make a high kick which sends the lightning whip upwards in a slashing manner or a roundhouse kick which makes the lightning whip slash at waist length, etc.

    Note : Can only be used two times per battle
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Only usable with the legs and not hands or anything else
    Note : No lightning techniques higher than B-rank to be used as long as this is active
    Note : No lightning techniques higher than S-rank usable the turn after deactivation
    Note : Lasts only for three of the user's turn before the effects of this technique wears off
    ~Declined~ Make it 2, as you were told. Also, define the level of damage this whip can do. You just state that you make a lightning whip and it's S-rank. So what? Why is it worthy of S-rank?
    Well, there is also the False Darkness Spear thats S-rank because it is capable of multiplying. I guess mines S-rank because it follows my leg just like a whip and is firm, capable of cutting through bone like any other lightning cutting technique.

    (Raiton : Raikoukatai) - Lightning Release : Lightning Leg
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Short - Mid
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user coats either his left or right leg with lightning chakra and performs the, 'Tiger' handseal. As the handseal is done, a yellow glow is formed around the lightning chakra-infused leg and electricity will start to crackle out of it every now and then. The user drops on one hand and makes a leg sweep, which turns into a gigantic, stable whip of lightning that follows the movement of the user's leg. Unlike a regular whip, this lightning whip is firm and solid-like. The lightning whip can also be used in different types of manners instead of being a leg sweep, the user could make a high kick which sends the lightning whip upwards in a slashing manner or a roundhouse kick which makes the lightning whip slash at waist length, etc. This whip is extremely deadly, capable of slicing through bones.

    Note : Can only be used two times per battle
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Only usable with the legs and not hands or anything else
    Note : No lightning techniques higher than B-rank to be used as long as this is active
    Note : No lightning techniques higher than S-rank usable the turn after deactivation
    Note : Lasts only for two of the user's turn before the effects of this technique wears off

    ~ Approved, though I removed the paralyzing part. ~
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Kenjustu : tsuppari) - Thrust Counter
    Rank : D
    Type : Dfensive
    Range : Short - Mid
    Chakra cost : None
    Damage points : None
    Description : When the enemy is coming to attack you with a Thrust attack with their sword, you grip your sword firmly and when the Thrust get's close to you. You quickly hit the blade, knocking it quickly to the side. Where the user continues towards the oppents Neck where they slice through it.
    -Must have some training in Kenjustu
    - Can only be used once
    - Can only be Taught by Cutie Pie

    (Kenjustu : karappo) - Empty Hand
    Rank : D
    Type : Defensive
    Range : Short - Mid
    Chakra cost : None
    Damage points : None
    Description : As the enemy tries to kill you with a Horizontal Slice or Slash, you will block at the level of the elbow on the wrist. Locking the elbow,grab the hilt of the sword effectivly locking teh opposite wrist. Where you then draw the sword up and slice your oppent.

    This technique grabs the oppents wrist as the Horizontal slice i coming down and then you have his wrist locked so he cant move. And then you pull teh sword up making him fall adn then as he's falling you slice him down

    -Both declined-
    You can pretty much do the same thing with free-form taijutsu.



    (Doton : gangu) - Toy Time
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user grabs a Chunk of earth, and manupliates it into any Toy that comes to mind, and when it's complete they add chakra to the toy and throw it on the ground where they wait till the chakra has been spread everywhere in the toy. Where it transform into the toy but in human size and with the ability to attack. The user can always so makes wepons for the Toy unless it was made with it already.
    -Takes 1 turn for the Chakra to Spread throught the toy
    - Can only be used 3 times
    - Only last 3 Turns
    - Can only be taught by Cutie Pie
    - No Earth justu while Toy Time is Activated

    -Declined, do not re-submit-
    What makes this different of an earth clone or other multiple creatures people can create?
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Lucifer View Post
    Resubmitting

    I completely forgot about this, i edited a few things and changed the name to blutsauger, meaning blood sucker, also changed the weapon to a japanese long sword, and removed the rank stuff.

    (Burutsusagaru) - Blutsauger
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40 (+5 for the kenjutsu boost.)
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Blutsauger, this name was given to the holy sword that has been said to have pierced Rikudou Sennin himself in his left side of his rib cage thus gaining the name blut-sucker absorbing some of his blood, that's why it gained the holy name. This sword was found later in the holy mountains of Iwagakure sealed away in an sacred shrine, it was found by, Lucifer a shinobi from Iwagakure, but the sword was in terrible condition so Lucifer, re-forged the long sword by coating it with a special materials. Very rare minirals found only in the mountains of Iwagakure, the blade gained a highly silverly color almost blinding, and the hilt is red with sacred golden colored markings on it and a red ribbon tied on the top, the sword guard is golden, lucifer also remade the sheat with the same rare material, with the sheat being completly black covered in golden markings and three ribbons tied to it. The sword itself is indestructible, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks from basic weapons. Anything above a B-Ranked attacks would hit Blutsauger out of the users hands, but the weapon itself can not block elemental attacks. The specialty of Blutensauger is that it conducts the basic five chakras of the spear, this is very handy when fighting a weapon battle in short range, the user can coat the sword with the desired element. Meaning whatever the spear cuts or touches petrifys and turns into that particulair element that it was conducting. (For example if channeled my suiton chakra into the blade and cut a random object it will turn into water). The elements increases the damage of basic kenjutsu by +10 more damage. Blutsauger only recognizes Lucifer as its master. Blutsauger is very heavy to the point that dropping it flat on the ground would leave a slight indentation on the ground, allowing only Lucifer to wield Blutsauger.

    Blutsauger; Appearance

    ♦ Note: Blutsauger can only be used by Lucifer.
    ♦ Note: The user can use Blutsauger only once per turn.
    ♦ Note: Every move that Blutsauger uses counts as one of the users 3 moves.
    ♦ Note: The user must have mastered the required elements inorder to use Blutsauger.

    ±± Declined ±± If you are resubmitting something you need to bold EVERY change. Also, plenty of infusable swords already, don't you think?
    Resubmitting again >_>

    I changed the sword back to zeh spear.

    (Burutsusagaru) - Blutsauger
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40 (+5 for the kenjutsu boost.)
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Blutsauger, this name was given to the holy spear that has been said to have pierced Rikudou Sennin himself in his left side of his rib cage thus gaining the name blut-sucker absorbing some of his blood, that's why it gained the holy name. This spear was found later in the holy mountains of Iwagakure sealed away in an sacred shrine, it was found by, Lucifer a shinobi from Iwagakure, but the spear was in terrible condition so Lucifer, re-forged the two-headed spear by coating it with a special materials. Very rare minirals found only in the mountains of Iwagakure, the blade gained a highly silverly color almost blinding, and spear itself gained a black with sacred golden colored markings on it and a red ribbon tied on the top, Lucifer also remade the sheat with the same rare material, with the sheat being completly black covered in golden markings and three ribbons tied to it. The spear itself is indestructible, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks from basic weapons, the user can also break the spear in half, making it two smaller ones. Anything above a B-Ranked attacks would hit Blutsauger out of the users hands, but the weapon itself can not block elemental attacks. The specialty of Blutensauger is that it conducts the basic five chakras of the spear, this is very handy when fighting a weapon battle in short range, the user can coat the sword with the desired element. Meaning whatever the spear cuts or touches petrifys and turns into that particulair element that it was conducting. (For example if channeled my suiton chakra into the blade and cut a random object it will turn into water). The elements increases the damage of basic kenjutsu by +10 more damage. Blutsauger only recognizes Lucifer as its master. Blutsauger is very heavy to the point that dropping it flat on the ground would leave a slight indentation on the ground, allowing only Lucifer to wield Blutsauger.

    Blutsauger; Appearance

    ♦ Note: Blutsauger can only be used by Lucifer.
    ♦ Note: The user can use Blutsauger only once per turn.
    ♦ Note: Every move that Blutsauger uses counts as one of the users 3 moves.
    ♦ Note: The user must have mastered the required elements inorder to use Blutsauger.

    -Declined-
    You changed it from a sword to a spear, however the concept is the same. Be creative. Also, turning into an element whatever the spear touches? lol that's a no go.


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    (Katon: Bakuenjin) - Fire Release: Exploding Flame Blades
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: After a series of destructive attacks, the user finishes with a torrent of blade-shaped flames that strikes the enemy in a spiral formation. Every time the enemy is hit with a blade, it explodes and burns the enemy. Described as one of the ultimate fire technique, this attack is so powerful and destructive that it has been shown to smash through giant stones which is known to have extremely tremendous endurance capabilities. This technique is mainly used as a finishing move and it's extremely hard to evade, due to the unpredictable flame blades which come from multiple direction, as seen in the gif below.

    Example; Link

    ♦ Note: This jutsu can only be taught by Lucifer.
    ♦ Note: The user must have mastered katon inorder to use this jutsu.
    ♦ Note: The user cannot perform fire technique above A-Rank, the next turn.

    -Declined-
    You didn't explain how this technique is performed. You just said you create a torrent of blades. How do you make them? Also, i'm not very found about the idea of destroying giant rocks with a fire technique as simple as that. Define giant (give an approximated size). Also, restrict the amount of times you are able to use this technique. It's an A-rank, not a D-rank


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    I recently signed the Gryphon contract, link to the convo. And approved contract.



    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Berufegōru) - Summoning Technique: Belphegor
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb and wipes blood over a tattoo placed on a body part and slams his hands on the ground to call forth the legendary and mighty Belphegor, the thunder emperor, Bell is a extremly large Gryphon and is able to carry a total of three people on his back, he is the exact same size as gamaken, but what makes him special is his fur/feathers it has gray-brown-blueish colors, with the tips of his feathers colored deep royalblue, and his eyes are completely blue with the round border being gray. Bell has the manipulation of the lightning affinity, from his birth he trained to master the lightning element and thus he become more accustomed to it, therefore he can use the lightning element upto S-rank, but the user has the perform the handseals inorder for Bell to perform the jutsus. Belphergor is often refered to as the Lightning Emperor.

    ♦ Note: Bell can only be summoned once per battle.
    ♦ Note: Belphegor can stay on the field for 4 turns per battle.
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by the holder of the gryphon contract.
    ♦ Note: The user must be Sannin rank or above to summon this gryphon.
    ♦ Note: The user cannot use the same element in the same turn used by Bell.
    ♦ Note: The user must have mastered the Lightning element inorder to summon Belphegor.

    -Leaving for Scorps-

    ±± Declined ±± I can't believe i'm explaining this again to a member who has mastered elemental ninjutsu, genjutsu, etc etc You don't need nor is it logical that you could make hand seals for your summons techniques.

    In ninjutsu there are 2 steps to perform a technique: Focusing your chakra and Molding your chakra (which is then done in two principles, shape and nature manipulation).

    Focusing your chakra is basically "willing" your chakra into being molded by focusing the correct amount needed. Molding your chakra is shaping it and manipulating its nature so that you can produce the end result. Molding can be done with hand seals or without them, depending on your skill, rank, mastery of the element, etc etc etc.

    So, why and how can you make hand seals to mold your summons chakra? I mean, how can your hands mold HIS chakra? Specially, not being in contact with him?


     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Jakou)-Musk
    Rank:B
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:20
    Damage:N/A
    Type:Supplementry
    Description:The users Ninken releases a large amount of scent secretions mixed with chakra that spreads out across the battle field, the chakra used so as to make the secretions react with human skin. The chakra mixed scent reacts well with the oils on the skin of humans marking them with a potent scent that is nigh on impossible to get off, in a similar way to how dogs mark their territory with the pugent scent that they produce naturally. The musk also can make the opponent nauseas, however it also allowers the Ninken and their human companion to track them by smell with ease. Inuzuka clan members are usually immune to this musk as they produce their own naturally.

    Changed to Natural dog odour rather than Methane.

    ±± Declined ±± Much better choice although you need to change the "scent" with pheromones as its basically what you want to release around the dog. Also, this would only work if its not raining and the nausea part needs to go or some restriction needs to come in. also, dojutsu users will clearly see this.

    (Jakou)-Musk
    Rank:B
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:20
    Damage:N/A
    Type:Supplementry
    Description:The users Ninken releases a large amount of pheromones mixed with chakra that spreads out across the battle field, the chakra used so as to make the pheromones react with human skin. The chakra mixed scent reacts well with the oils on the skin of humans marking them with a potent scent that is nigh on impossible to get off, in a similar way to how dogs mark their territory with the pugent scent that they produce naturally. The musk also can make the opponent nauseas, however it also allowers the Ninken and their human companion to track them by smell with ease. Inuzuka clan members are usually immune to this musk as they produce their own naturally. Doujutsu users will also see the release of the pheromones due to it being melded with chakra.
    -Nausia lasts for one turn and can prevent the opponent from using techniques that require exhaling in fear of vomiting, it also disrupts the opponents sense of balance.
    -The pheromones will not be able to use the air as a medium if it is raining.

    -Declined-
    You can't control what your opponent's think/feel, so the part about the opponent having fear of exhaling as to go.


    (Doton | Konpakuto) Earth Release | Compact

    Rank:A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Type: Supplemetuary
    Description: The user focuses their chakra into earth or a earth technique, using their chakra to manipulate its composition resulting in the chosen areas particles being crushed closer together. This ultimately results in said earth being firmer, harder, stronger, yet it also slightly decreases in volume. Not only that, but this could be used on a area of the ground, resulting in tunnel collapse and anything that is within the tunnel being crushed as the jutsu takes place, leaving no trace of the previous tunnel. This jutsu is extremely quick, so much so, that it finishes so fast that it could be viewed as this technique being used in conjunction with the previous earth technique.
    -+20 to Earth techniques this is used on.

    -Declined, do not re-submit-
    This technique was already created in the past

    (Doton | Boketsu) Earth Release | Buried Alive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Type: Offensive
    Description: The user clasps their hands together, causing a large amount of soil to be summoned in a area of their choice, the soil being summoned in the shape which the user desires, for example a cube, pyramid or prism, and retaining the outwards shape and volume at all times. The soil also being compact enough so as to let little to no oxygen in. The user could summon the soil in the area their opponent is in, their opponent would be unable to move due to the soil being so tightly positioned around their body with little leeway to move the soil due to it constantly retaining its outwards shape, and with each and every inhalation, the opponent would breathe in a inumerable amount of soil resulting in their lungs filling with derebis that would cause suffucation. Due to the positioning of the soil, it would be impossible to dig your way out, as you wouldn't be able to create the needed movements, and if you were able to, the tunnel would immeaditly collapse resulting in you once again being stuck. The volume of the soil summoned could be as large as 50m3. The summoning of the soil is fairly fast, taking mere seconds. If not less.
    -The soil doesn't result in the opponent being crushed. But applies enough pressure to their body so as to prevent them from moving.
    -Can only be used 2x.

    -Declined, do not re-submit-
    Similar technique already exists.
     
         
    Last edited by Alucard; 04-24-2012 at 07:26 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Index blast (sakuin bakufuu)
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short/Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Description:The user channel chakra to the index finger and makes the shape of a gun by pointing the thumb upwards and the rest of the fingers into a fist leaving the index finger out giving the shape of a gun.After the user has channelling chakra to the index finger he will hold his shoulder depending on the hand used.By hold the same shoulder as the gun he will channel more chakra releasing a straight blast of chakra which can go up to Mid range.
    Note:
    -Only usable three times a battle
    -Must be from the Hyuga clan
    -Can only be used/Taught by Foxnaruto


    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 04-23-2012 at 08:47 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    ( Nisemono no Wana ) - Fake Trap
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    A very simple but ingenious tecnique, the user touches the ground. This causes random wires of earth to erupt all over the battlefield, meaningless runic symbols to be etched on the ground, and the earth all over the battlefield to appear disturbed. The purpose of this technique is to make the opponent believe that the user has actually booby-trapped the entire ground, when in reality the wires, symbols and disturbed earth conceal nothing and cannot hurt even a Genin. When combined with Genjutsu, such as the False Surroundings Technique, it can ully convince the opponent that touching the wires, symbols, or disturbed earth is a bad idea, giving the user a great tactical advantage on the battlefield; even without the Genjutsu, the opponent will still remain naturally wary of the effects and still avoid them, until he discovers them to be false.
    ____________
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    ( Mazogidoru ) - Masochistic Sacrificial Doll
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 30
    Description:
    A useful technique to avoid taking injuries, the user makes a small, human shaped doll in his palm out of either Wind, Lightning or Fire, places a weak Genjutsu on it, and tosses it in the way of an incoming attack. The doll then grows to human-size, and takes the attack itself, getting destroyed. Also, to redirect the force of powerful attacks, it explodes, spreading the force over a wide area. As a result, the explosion is weak, and even if the opponent is caught in it, will not give him anything more than some second-degree burns at best. The effect of the Genjutsu is to cause an opponent who is attacking physically ( swords, fists, etc. ) to subconsciously select the doll as his target. The Genjutsu can be broken easily, but when the opponent is moving fast to attack, it is unlikely he will recognize it unless he has a Sharingan.
    The doll cannot protect the user from wide-area attacks, even weak ones.
    Forbidden-rank attacks focusing on a single target will easily cut through the doll and continue to the user, though they will be slowed down and weakened to S-rank level.
    This technique may be used only thrice per battle.
    ____________
    -Declined-
    It shouldn't be able to stop any technique above A rank since your tech itself is A, so mention that as well.

    ( Fuuton: Babironu no Koshusenzai ) - Wind Release: Hanging Gardens of Babylon
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description:
    An advanced version of the Wind Release: Gallows Frame, the user makes five handseals and causes nooses of wind chakra to form and remain suspended in the air around the battlefield at all heights. The nooses by themselves do not do much, but if an unsuspecting opponent is moving, there is a good possibility of him being caught in one of the nooses and forcibly stopped and injured. Indeed, the faster the opponent is moving, the more damage his neck will take due to the sudden stop he is brought to by the noose.
    The nooses cannot harm a stationary opponent, nor one who is coated in fire ( wind's weakness ) or any suitably strong defense; neither can they harm larger than human sized opponents, such as summons. The user must also be wary, when he moves, to avoid the nooses; since he knows their positions he can still move around, but only at normal speeds.
    Dojutsu users will be able to see the nooses, and avoid them; although it is hard to do when moving at Gates-level speeds. This technique lasts for three turns.
    ____________
    -Approved-
     
         
    Last edited by Nexus; 04-25-2012 at 01:53 PM.

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    (Futon: Piasu-fū no warutsu) - Wind Release: Waltz of Piercing wind
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Damage Points:40 (50 if combined with a fire attack)
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Description: The user concentrates their wind chakra into their feet. The user then swiftly kicks and releases two tornados that head towards the opponent and combine when they hit the enemy, making a whirlwind around him/her, the opponent is then consecutivley cut by the whirwind. If the user or the opponent use a fire attack while the opponent is trapped in the whirlwind, the opponent will be burned to death
    Note:
    -Can only be taught by Ouacus
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle
    -The whirlwind around the opponent lasts for two turns

    -Declined-
    State the size of the tornadoes. Remove the part where it does 50 damage if combined with a fire technique and the part stating the opponent will be burned to death. Take out the last note, saying the whirlwind lasts for 2 turns.
     
         
    Last edited by Alucard; 04-24-2012 at 07:31 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Fuuton/Katon: 5 Sutā Tatsumaki [Wind/Fire Style Combo: 5 Star Tornado]
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 100
    Description: The User, while in the air, creates an orb of wind around their body that rotates at an extremely Fast speed. The user then instantly shoots fire up into the air from his mouth, both arms, and legs. The rotating of the Wind orb will pick up with fire and form into a large Tornado. The user will slowly rotate downwards while in the tornado and eventually touch the ground. The user can begin running and can change the direction of the tornado so that it cannot be dodged.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: User takes 50 damage from Chakra strain.
    Note: No Fire or Wind techniques above A Ranked for 2 turns.
    Note: No Fire or Wind Techniques above B Ranked for 1 turn.
    Note: Costs 2/3 moves in a turn.
    (Not sure if the turn usage was needed, but added just in case.)



    -Declined-
    Damage points are incorrect. If you rotate a sphere of wind that fast near you and add such amounts of fire chakra, the fire would engulf you completely. Also remove the part where it says the tornado cannot be dodged and add physical damage to you. Burned limbs which prevent you from engaging in taijutsu or performing hand seals with normal speed, etc. Also, add the hand seals needed for this jutsu to be performed. And a simple clap of hand seals won't cut it as this is forbidden rank.

    Hyouton: Burakkuaisubīmu [Ice Release: Black Ice Beam]
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user forms an Elemental Rasengan in his hand and enhances it with Black Ice chakra. The rotation takes the Chakra and rotates it at an incredibly fast rate, allowing the user to project it away from their hand instead of having to throw it. The beam will cause immense Frostbite damage to whatever it touches as well as freeze on contact. This can also be used to cover any solid object in Ice or Freeze Water. The beam coming from the Rasengan is larger than the Rasengan itself, freezing the air as it travels and adding to the size of the blast.
    Note: Can only be used 4x per battle (as this is really a cannon technique but with applied results to avoid confusion)
    Note: No Black Ice Techs Next Turn

    -Declined-
    No rasengan variations





    Kikōhō: [Tri Beam Cannon]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user, while honing in on a target, channels and immense amount of chakra into his arms and form a triangle with his hands by keeping the fingers on each hand together, overlapping the index finger on the one hand with the pinky of the other hand, and overlapping the thumbs. The object being focused on gets zoomed in on and visualized inside that triangle. The user will then concentrate all the chakra into the triangle and release it into one of three wide beams of pure chakra. The user can separate the beams into 3 different rapid succession blasts, however they will be weaker by comparison and yet still add up to the total destructive force of one large S Ranked blast. Each beam is capable of destroying Concrete and continuing through it. When used in the air, the user will appear to levitate for the duration of the technique and is even more accurate than when on land, capable of leaving a 20 meter crater in the earth at the range of its impact.
    Note: One Beam is equivalent to S Rank.
    Note: Two Beams are equivalent to A Rank EACH.
    Note: Three Beams are equivalent to B Ranked EACH.
    Note: Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    Note: No Pure Chakra Ninjutsu can be used in the same turn as this technique.


    -Declined-
    Remove the levitation part. The last note doesn't make much sense. If you can't use raw chakra, which is the 'regular' or 'normal' chakra, how would you be able to use elemental chakra? Also 20 meter crater is a bit too much for the B and A-rank version


    ^_^ Feel free to make changes to the above.
     
         
    Last edited by Alucard; 04-24-2012 at 08:06 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal:River Otters
    Scroll OwnerAntihero
    Other Users who have signed contract: None
    Summoning Boss if existing: Zalog, the Don
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Mina, the Thorn... Chlick, the Yellow... Cliff, the Swift
    Description and Background:River otters are sleek, furry, streamlined aquatic mammals that live in rivers, streams, ponds, and marshes. They are a large type of weasel. River otters are from 3 to 4 feet long and weigh about 44-82 pounds. The tail is 1 to 1 1/2 feet long. Webbed feet help the otter swim. These sleek mammals have dense fur, short legs, and semi-retractible claws. Both the ears and the nostrils close when the animal is under water. River otters are kept warm by their dense fur and high metabolism. They are active all year long, even through very cold winters. Careful grooming with their forepaws keeps the fur waterproof.

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    ±± Declined ±± Contract already exists and taken by Shinjitsu

    Knuckle Duster
    Type:Weapon
    Rank:A
    Range: Close
    Chakra: 40 when elemental charkra is being chanled through it
    Damage: 40, 80 when charkra is cheanled through
    Description: Knuckle Duster are a pair of gauntlets made from a flexible fabric and leather covered by fully articulated scale-plates. It can be used for both attack and defense in hand-to-hand combat or used against a Kunai or short-sword. When making a fist the backhand is protected, from the fist just above the knuckles, this allowed the user to utilize the gauntlets as melee weapons while still protecting the hand from damage when punching.


    -Declined-
    You're missing the japanese name and the chakra cost is wrong. Explain how the gauntles enhance your hand to hand combat skills as so far you haven't mentioned any kind of ability. Remove the damage points. That way you could do 80 damage which is equivalent to a S-rank technique each time you perform a punch.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 04-24-2012 at 09:10 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Katon: Zou Kasai Kaimetsu) Fire Release: Elephant Fire Annihilation
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user performs the Serpent - Tiger hand seals, where as the user smashes their hand into the ground, releasing a massive amount of chakra into the ground and the air above. The chakra will then rise into the air and turn into a massive fire in front of the user, as he manipulates it into a giant elephant, half the size of Gamaken. The giant elephant will then charge the opponent with such brute strength and explode into a fury of flames on impact destroying the surroundings, leaving a crater 5 meters deep into the ground.
    Note:
    -Can only be taught by JiraiyaEroSennin
    -Can only be used twice per battle
    -Cannot use any fire jutsus for the next turn

    -Declined-
    You must follow the rules of the first post of this thread. With your rank you can only submit up to A-Rank techniques



    (Katon: Kasai Makai Ni-doru) Fire Release: Fire Hell Needles
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user performs the Tiger handseal, while releasing his fire chakra throughout his body, and as the chakra is well built up, he releases it in all directions. The chakra is released immediately and as soon as it exits th body, it is manipulated into incredible small needles made of fire.
    Note:
    -Can only be taught by JiraiyaEroSennin

    -Declined-
    Restrictions? Also, though you said they were incredible small, i take it that they're visible to the naked eye, since they're made of fire.


    (Katon: Kasai kouchisho) Fire Release: Fire Prison
    Type: Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user releases a huge amount of chakra into the ground, and as the opponent is stand above the ground, the chakra will be released into the air while converting into fire, creating a powerful fire prison which will slowly become smaller and consume the opponent.
    Note:
    -Can only be taught by JiraiyaEroSennin

    -Declined, do not re-submit-
    Similar jutsu exists
     
         
    Last edited by Alucard; 04-24-2012 at 08:25 PM.

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