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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Technique: (souseiki harinezumi) Haze
    Rank:S
    Range:Short
    Type:Sup
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/a
    Description: The user will bite his thumb. Wipe the blood on his tattoo and do 4 handseals ending with the tiger handseal. Once done. A Small bird. (The size of a parrot) Appears on the user shoulder. This bird has no purpose but to give the user chakra. Similar to the toad sage, and Tsunade Slugs. But this is different. As the bird stays on the shoulder of the user their jutsu goes up by 1 Rank. But only can have 1 jutsu go up 1 rank per turn. The highest it can go up to is S rank....

    -Can Only stay on the field for 4 turns
    -Cant Attack
    -If detached from the shoulder it wont transfer chakra
    -Must Be taught by Teno and have Signed THE LBOP Contract.
    Link to approval of birds

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    ~ Declined ~
    No resubmit

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    (Shakuton - pirittokuru haretsu) Scorch Style: Fiery Explosion
    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Short-Mid
    Type:Attack/Defense
    Chakra Cost:50
    Damage Points:90
    Description: The User Will build and channel a huge amount of his scorch chakra in the middle of his body.. Once done he will do a sequence of 5 handseals. Once done he will Release all of the stored up scorch chakra from his body in a Explosion type fashion.. The Scorch Will Drain the Water Out of Everything that is in the Scorch Explosion. This can be used in Defensive purposes also. Due to the explosion from the body. The user gets light headed due to the strain on the body and wont be able to do 3 jutsus but only 2 the next round

    :Note:Can Only Do 2 jutsus the next Turn
    :Note: Explosion Last for about 5seconds. Making him slightly Vulnerable while the explosion is going on
    :Note:Cant Use Fire or Wind in the same Turn as this jutsu
    :Note:Can Only be Taught By Teno

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    ~ Declined ~
    Doesn't need to be F-rank

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    (Shakuton-Pirittokuru Tebukuro)Scorch Style: Blazing Gloves
    Typeffensive
    Rank:S
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: +10 to Scorch Techniques
    Description: The Blazing Gloves are a pair of Bright Red Rare Leather, With small spikes on the knuckles that contains Scorch chakra.. These Gloves have the ability to give scorch chakra to the user. The User Will do a Scorch Tech and the Gloves will Give the Scorch jutsu more juice. Either if its from the body.. Or simply created in the air. It increases the damage dealt from Scorch jutsus. Thus Giving Scorch Jutsus +10 While wearing these Gloves. Though The Gloves dont give off chakra until a scorch jutsu is used. If Used Two turn. You must Wait two turns to use them again so the chakra can restore inside the gloves.

    :Note: Can Only be wield by Teno
    :Note: Gloves Cant be Torn or Ripped due to its hard, rare leather material
    :Note: Cant Use Water Above A Rank. Whenever These Gloves are used (Channeling Chakra to the user)

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    ~ Declined ~
    Extra chakra does not auto = more power.
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 08-13-2012 at 12:49 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Fūinjutsu: Fusenmei Fūin) - Sealing Technique: Self Disruption Seal
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This technique is a seal that's printed usually on the back of the user's hand, with the mark of "Disruption" in a large Kanji letter, this is a special seal that has only one purpose, which is to alert the user of foreign chakra in which it enters the user's body, which is basically what activates the seal's ability, This seal has some of the user's own chakra, therefore when a foreign chakra enters the user's body the seal glows in a dark red color and surges of red lightning like surges of light, these surges produce a sound that's familiar by the user as well as the bright glowing light, this is a pretty useful technique since it alerts the user of foreign chakra in which inside his body by his opponent the second the foreign chakra enters the body, which is useful in letting the user know that he is under a genjutsu technique used by his opponent, the only downside to this technique is that if the user used a Cursed Seal, the Seal would glow as well since it's a foreign chakra that's not the user's own, thus the user isn't able to know if he's under a genjutsu whilst the Cursed Seal is activated.
    Note: The Seal glows 3 times per battle.
    Note: Must be placed in the user's biography.

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    ~ Declined ~
    How exactly does the seal "know" when a foreign chakra has entered your body ? Its just a seal.
    (Fūinjutsu: Fusenmei Fūin) – Sealing Technique: Self Disruption Seal
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This technique is a seal that's printed usually on the back of the user's hand, with the mark of "Disruption" in a large Kanji letter, this is a special seal that has only one purpose, which is to alert the user of foreign chakra in which it enters the user's body, which is basically what activates the seal's ability, This seal has some of the user's own chakra and is connected directly to the user's chakra circularity system, therefore when a foreign chakra enters the user's body, the user's chakra inside the seal is disrupted and when the disruption happens it causes the seal glows in a dark red color and surges of red lightning like surges of light, these surges produce a sound that's familiar by the user as well as the bright glowing light alerting the user that a foreign chakra has entered his body, this is a pretty useful technique since it alerts the user of foreign chakra in which inside his body by his opponent the second the foreign chakra enters the body, which is useful in letting the user know that he is under a genjutsu technique used by his opponent, the only downside to this technique is that if the user used a Cursed Seal, the Seal would glow as well since it's a foreign chakra that's not the user's own, thus the user isn't able to know if he's under a genjutsu whilst the Cursed Seal is activated.
    Note: The Seal glows 3 times per battle.

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    ~ Declined ~
    Needs one more restriction. Also add on EIG and SM to the CS restriction.

    (Yōsē Kirikorosu) – The Oni Slayer
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The Oni Slayer is a specially made Katana that's carved with Japanese Kanji letters with the meaning of "The Blood Cutter", this Katana is forged with the usage of pure Steel and and is black colored with a hardwood handle, and the user's blood is forged within the blade itself and when the user re-sheathes the blade most of the blade of the Katana is covered in blood that's resonating with a faint small dark red aura around the blade, for a special effect, in which makes the user unusable unless it was by the person who's blood is forged within the Katana, if someone else wields this Katana a red lightning is automatically released out of the handle electrocuting who's holding it and numbing their hands, this blade has 3 abilities, the blade of this Katana is extremely sharp that if anyone just placed their hands on the blade they would be wounded, the sharpness of the blade grants the user more power in the usage of Kenjutsu techniques which allows the user to cut through A-rank ninjutsu techniques with ease, the second ability the Katana holds is that it gives the user's pure chakra techniques a red color on the contrary to the pale blue color, as the blade has it's own sealed chakra within the blade, making the user's chakra somewhat evil, and making their pure chakra techniques equal to elemental techniques in strength, meaning that if an A-rank pure chakra technique collides with an elemental A-rank technique they would both cancel out each other, however this ability has a serious disadvantage, in which when the user holds the blade he cannot access his elemental chakra and therefore cannot utilize any elemental based techniques including KG elemental chakra, and the user can only use pure chakra based techniques like non elemental ninjutsu, kenjutsu or anything that doesn't include the usage of elemental chakra, the Katana's third ability is that it alerts the user if a foreign chakra entered his body, like a genjutsu for example, whenever the user's body is injected with a foreign chakra the blade's Kanji letters glow in a bright red color and releases a sound that's similar to a demon's roar.


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    ~ Declined ~
    Too many abilities, paragraph so un-split up that its hard to read

    Replacing:
    (Sōdō) - Rebellion
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (+ 30 for blocking each fire attack)
    Damage: (20 base attack for normal use) (+15 damage to every fire based jutsu)
    Description: the Rebellion sword is made out of a special metal that is able to use the user's fire chakra , it has a large white blade with a silver skull shaped handle ,it's worn on the user's back like Kakashi's sword when he was young , when the user channels his fire chakra into the blade, a fire Aura surrounds the white blade making the sword more lighter and enhancing the user with faster reactions and turning the blades color into bloody red, as long as the user is wielding the blade he can perform any fire technique with the use of only a single handseal, also by adding the +30 fire chakra of the user to the blade , the blade can block fire techniques up to A-rank negating the fire and absorbing it but still receives a certain amount of damage from the attack.
    Note: Cannot be used without mastering the fire element.
    Note: User takes -10 damage when absorbing a fire technique.
    Note: Can only block fire techniques 3 times per battle.
    Note: Can only be wielded by Dante..
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 08-13-2012 at 12:53 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Dokueki) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Agwe's Venom

    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Allows the user to summon a mist composed of thousands of nano-sized box jellyfishes. The mist moves concisely as a whole. Due to their small size, they don't require a large amount of water as per se, rather each individual is able to survive inside very small water sources, which would enable them to survive, for example, inside the droplets of the mist or inside the human body. Using their powerful venom, they infect the body and eat away the flesh, causing great pain throughout the process. Since they're minimal, although they have a certain lightning side to it, they are unable to preform jutsus of any kind, rather produce a paralyzes effect as soon as the first nano-box penetrates the body, leaving the body stiff and hard to move. As they're summoned they bring forth a water mist, distinguishable from the regular mist by the naked eye only because of an soft and discrete unnatural glow on the droplets of the mist, as if it it alive, unless they're summoned directly into water or an opponent.
    *The lightning affinity allows only an equally strong lightning jutsu to kill them*
    *Can only be used once*
    *Can be summoned directly on the opponent, by direct contact*
    *Last 4 turns in the battlefield, take care of an average adult within a turn*

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    ~ Declined ~
    OP.

    ( Genjutsu: Kohitsuji Shoutan Raikou) Illusion Arts: Lamb of Lightning Tears

    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: After 2 handseals, the user will cast a genjutsu on the opponent, making him feel 2 lightning threads surge from each eye across his/her face. The lightning threads will cause great pain as they go around the head, pulling the facial muscles into a wide eyed shocked expression and then shoot into the ground, pulling the head downwards to have the opponent face the heaven. At that point, the lightning strings that links the head to the ground pressure into an area of the brain not dealing with vision but the interpretation of vision (left occipital lobe and temporal lobes), signaling the user's chakra messing with those particular areas. At which point, the opponent becames mentally blind, able to see but enable to make sense of it, as the genjutsu mimics Visual Agnosia.
    The user has to rely on senses other than vision to perceive through this genjutsu, including but exclusively Sharingan, Byakugan and other Rinnegan, as it does not create a cloak to their eyes but actually messes with the perception and interpretation of visual stimmuli.
    *Can only be used thrice*
    *Is basically a normal genjutsu with a visual twist, it is as weak to any other method of dispelling as any other genjutsu*

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    ~ Declined ~
    One more restriction, if you please.

    ( Fuuton: Hakugei Saifon ) Wind Style: White Whale Siphon

    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: After preforming one handseal, the user can, for the duration of 1 turn, make the air at a 5 meters radius around one or multiple opponents move violently from or into their nose and mouth, the first preventing oxygenation and subsquent asphyxia, the later forcing the opponent to inhale whatever toxic substances the air around contains, or simply knock them out from the overdose on oxygen.
    *Can only be used once every 3 turns*

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    ~ Declined ~
    No resubmit. Has been tried multiple times already.
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 08-13-2012 at 12:55 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Kuchyose No Jutsu: Trisura, Gogyou shikaku-Summoning Technique: Trisura, The Aqu-A-ssassin-
    Type: Defensive/Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: -
    Description: The user wipes blood on his fan and charges it with a huge amount of chakra. Then he swings it and summons a vulture as large as gamaken. This creature is the protector of the borders of the Vulture empire has with the sea. It has two huge wings, a long tail, webbing between its large toes and the ability to hold its breathe for a very long time to help it swim and dive. Trisura could use up to A rank water element techniques of the techniques the user know. She is great at transporting and unlike many of the vultures she is friendly.

    -Can only be summoned once.
    -Can only use one A rank water jutsu every three turns.
    -Can only remain on the battle field for 4 turns.
    -Absorb +15 chakra points from the user for every turn it remains on the battlefield.


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    When resubmitting a technique you are required to bold the changes


    Ninja Art of The Sparking Smoke - Ninpo No Pikapika Kemuri

    Rank: B
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long*
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: 40
    Description: Holding four smoke bomb between his fingers, the user manipulate his chakra, charging those bombs with electricity and then throw them at the enemy. The bombs which explode on contract have two uses, either to numb and exhaust a part of the enemy's body or by hitting the ground around the enemy changing its texture and imbalance him/her. Followed with creating a large smoke cloud around the enemy, making it hard to see him while the sparkles of electricity the smoke bombs have charged makes it possible to see the enemy's movement through the shadow of him reflected over the smoke.

    -usable 3 times per battle.

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    ±± Declined ±±
    Changing the texture of ground?

    Art of Illusion: Eye crackers - Genjutsu: Kurakka-Metsuki -

    Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30(+10 per turn)
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user swings a metal weapon in a flipping motion, a sword is mainly used for this technique. focusing his chakra through the enemy's nerve system as that weapon glitters. From that instant, the illusion starts. The enemy sees that the sparkle extremely strong that it blinds him, unknowing that its this technique's user who have attacked the enemy's sight nerves by blocking it and not letting the vision reach out to the brain properly. While being under this jutsu, the enemy would be unable to recognize that he is under a genjutsu but rather being under the damages caused by a strong glitter.
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Lasts for 2 turns maximum.

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    ±± Declined ±±
    Similar technique already exists.
    Water Style: The Sheild of Will - Suiton: Tokuiyoku

    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: - (-50 to the user)
    Description: Standing on a water source, the user forms the monkey handseal while manipulating his chakra to move the water beneath him/her as he touch it with his hand and raise it as the water raise at an extremely fast speed creating a huge shield that has the user's arm implanted into it to be able to channel the huge amount of chakra to turn the water into that huge thick wall that could cover up to long range of both of the user's sides and height. The user can keep this jutsu active as long as his arm is implanted in that wall which regenerate as long as they user is using it.

    -The user can not use water based techniques after using this technique through the entire battle.
    -Deals massive damages to the user's arm since it breaks the user's implanted arm bones. Making him barely able to form handseals after using this technique.
    -This technique can be cut through with an S rank earth element technqiue and S rank lightening element techniques or above.
    -If an S rank lightening technique is to be against this technique, the user is to be electrified unavoidably.

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    Reword the description and use fullstops.

    Ninja Art of The Sparking Smoke - Ninpo No Pikapika Kemuri

    Rank: B
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: 40
    Description: Holding four smoke bomb between his fingers, the user manipulate his chakra, charging those bombs with electricity and then throw them at the enemy. The bombs which explode on contract have two uses, either to numb and exhaust a part of the enemy's body or by hitting the ground around the enemy cracking it apart and imbalance him/her. Followed with creating a large smoke cloud around the enemy, making it hard to see him while the sparkles of electricity the smoke bombs have charged makes it possible to see the enemy's movement through the shadow of him reflected over the smoke.

    -usable 3 times per battle.

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    Aside from the smoke, this is similar to most lightning enhanced explosion jutsu.


    Kuchyose No Jutsu: Trisura, Gogyou shikaku-Summoning Technique: Trisura, The Aqu-A-ssassin-
    Type: Defensive/Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: -
    Description: The user wipes blood on his fan and charges it with a huge amount of chakra. Then he swings it and summons a vulture as large as gamaken. This creature is the protector of the borders of the Vulture empire has with the sea. It has two huge wings, a long tail, webbing between its large toes and the ability to hold its breathe for a very long time to help it swim and dive. Trisura could use up to A rank water element techniques of the techniques the user know. She is great at transporting and unlike many of the vultures she is friendly.

    -Can only be summoned once.
    -Can only use one A rank water jutsu every three turns.
    -Can only remain on the battle field for 4 turns.
    -Absorb +15 chakra points from the user for every turn it remains on the battlefield.

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    ~ Declined ~
    Quote the initial version which was declined so we can compare changes, not the one where Scorps tells you to bold it.
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 08-13-2012 at 12:58 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Wasurete shimatta aisuiryūjon: Anata no ushironi! | Forgotten Ice Illusion: Behind You!
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: After performing a single hand seal the user will quickly create an ice mirror a few meters in front of the opponent. The ice mirror is very dense thus blocking the opponent's vision of the user and also serving as a reflecting surface. The moment the opponent sees the ice mirror he will be trapped in a Genjutsu. Seeing his reflection in it he will, surprisingly, notice the user running towards him, from behind, with a kunai in his hand.
    Note: Must master Hyouton and Genjutsu
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this

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    ~ Declined ~
    Similar techniques exist

    Hyouton: Aisu kogen o takameru | Ice Release: Elevating Ice Plateau
    Type: Supplementary, Defensive
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: After completely mastering and specializing in the Hyouton release, the user is able to quicky create an ice pleateau beneath him. The plateau is created by releasing Hyouton chakra through his legs, into the ground. Before the plateau rises, as it's forming, the user can slightly alter its form, making it shield-like from any direction. The plateau rises very fast, taking the user a few meters above the ground. While creating the plateau, it produces a quite loud hissing sound that can be heard up to long range.
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this

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    ~ Declined ~
    It's not really a plateau if it only rises a few metres, use some other word

    Hyouton: Hangingu shonyuseki| Ice Release: Hanging Speleothems
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40 (+ extra damage depending on the force)
    Description: By channeling chakra throughout the battlefield the user can create a plateau above the enemy from which a huge number of speleothems are hanging. They're very sharp and can easily pierce through the opponent, potentially causing immediate death, if the opponent collides with them with force. As they're formed they don't fall down, instead, they stay at the very place they're created. They will have the best effect if created quickly, just a few meters above the enemy. The plateau has a radius of approx. 3 meters and the spikes are just a few centimeres thick, much alike as the picture provided.
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this



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    ~ Declined ~
    For heaven's sake use a word most RPers will understand so they can properly know what's going on in your technique
     
         
    Last edited by Emperor; 08-13-2012 at 01:00 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Genjutsu: Heki Shiagari) Illusion Technique: False Completion
    Type: Illusion/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage: None
    Description: A very simple illusion, while most illusions make the opponent believe in something that they would not normally see, this technique takes advantages of what the opponent already expects to happen to make the illusion seem tied perfectly with reality. This technique is often used when the opponent is about to use a technique. The user must have sight of the opponent while this technique is activated, the opponent necessarily does not have to have sight of the user. At the same time as the user has sight of the opponent, he will perform the Serpent hand seal immediately trapping the opponent within the depths of the illusion. When the opponent uses a technique, they often believe their technique will be completed if there is nothing to stop them or interrupt them. The opponent starts and carries on with the technique without knowing that the illusion has already affected them. Believing that there is nothing wrong they will continue with their move, the illusion causes them to falsely imagine the completion of their technique. The illusion will trick them into seeing exactly what they want to see, but outside of their mind the illusion stops them from actually completing the technique by entrapping them in a false situation within their mind where their actions no longer affect their real body. Thus while they complete the technique in their mind, they do not complete it in reality. Any part of the technique that they started, they will lose control over and those parts will immediately fall apart and fade into nothingness. This enables the user to prevent any damage from the technique the opponent was planning to use. Only the technique that this illusion was directed toward will be affected by this technique, the remaining parts of the opponent's move will proceed to happen unaffected.
    ~The user must wait one turn before he can reuse this technique.
    ~The user cannot use any genjutsu above S-rank on the same turn and on the next turn.
    ~This strain this technique causes the user prevents him from using any elemental technique on the same turn requiring the user to take a large sacrifice on the versatility of their following attacks.

    ~The user cannot use any techniques that are the same rank as the technique they prevented from being completed on the same turn as this technique is used excluding this technique of course if it is the case.

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    ~ Declined ~
    Upon reading it again, I've come up with a couple of things. Here's my problem with this. Firstly, you need to explain how even though you don't know what he's going to do, your illusion can successfully replicate the effects of the technique. Second, "a false situation where the mind does not affect the body" is not a clear way of explaining it and might be abused to be very OP.

    (Genjutsu: Kisei Enkai) Illusion Technique: Parasite Feast
    Type: Illusion/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage: 80 mental damage
    Description: This technique relies on making the opponent believe that they are infected with a staggering amount of flesh consuming parasites. This technique does not affect the opponent's whole body but only a specific part of their body such as arms, legs, mouth, etc, to enable to opponent to still be able to fight while the illusion is affecting them. The user will perform two hand seals applying the illusion onto the opponent, the user must have sight of the opponent's body in order for this technique to work. Whatever body part that the user designed the illusion to affect will immediately begin transforming in the opponent's mind and begin rotting away. The user can manipulate the illusion to transform that body part to become grotesque making it difficult for the opponent to even look at the body part. The body part will no longer be in the opponent's control, it will cease to function properly, and will begin to cause tremendous mental damage to the victim that will cause the opponent to collapse due to overwhelming stress at the start of the user's next turn (if the opponent is able to break the illusion during his turn in between then this does not apply). The illusion only affects one part of the opponent's body but they cannot use any techniques involving that body part in any way immediately after the technique is activated, but they can still use the rest of their body. Because this technique is designed to cause pain, pain cannot break someone out of it.
    ~Can only be used three times per battle, no other genjutsu can be used while this one is active.

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    ~ Declined ~
    You need to explain how big this body part will be and exceptions. For example, if you pick his head, does that mean he can't use anything that involves his brain ?
    (Genjutsu: Heki Shiagari) Illusion Technique: False Completion
    Type: Illusion/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage: None
    Description: A very simple illusion, while most illusions make the opponent believe in something that they would not normally see, this technique takes advantages of what the opponent already expects to happen to make the illusion seem tied perfectly with reality. This technique is often used when the opponent is about to use a technique. The user must have sight of the opponent while this technique is activated, the opponent necessarily does not have to have sight of the user. At the same time as the user has sight of the opponent, he will perform the Serpent hand seal immediately trapping the opponent within the depths of the illusion. When the opponent uses a technique, they often believe their technique will be completed if there is nothing to stop them or interrupt them. The opponent starts and carries on with the technique without knowing that the illusion has already affected them. Believing that there is nothing wrong they will continue with their move, the illusion starts right as the opponent begins his technique. For each and every technique there is a specific procedure or specific focus required to perform it. This illusion instead of allowing the opponent to achieve this specific focus or procedure fools the opponent into following another procedure. This one is called the dummy procedure. The illusion fools the opponent into forgetting the technique they actually started, and replaces it with the dummy procedure that they believe will result in a technique nonetheless. The dummy procedure actually has no purpose at all and completing it will produce no result because it is nothing but a gathering of wasteful actions. The opponent will simply start performing the dummy procedure that the user had inserted into his train of thought, making any remains of the actual technique collapse and fade into nothingness. The opponent will perform the dummy procedure in reality with their body as if they were about to perform a real technique, but then realize that it does not actually do anything and break away from the illusion after it achieves the purpose of preventing the opponent's initial technique. This enables the user to prevent any damage from the technique the opponent was planning to use. Only the technique that this illusion was directed toward will be affected by this technique, the remaining parts of the opponent's move will proceed to happen unaffected.
    ~The user must wait one turn before he can reuse this technique and he can use this technique only a maximum of three times per battle.
    ~The user cannot use any genjutsu above S-rank on the same turn and on the next turn.
    ~This strain this technique causes the user prevents him from using any elemental technique on the same turn requiring the user to take a large sacrifice on the versatility of their following attacks.
    ~The user cannot use any techniques that are the same rank as the technique they prevented from being completed on the same turn as this technique is used excluding this technique of course if it is the case.

    ______________
    ~ Approved ~
    Added a note.

    (Genjutsu: Kisei Enkai) Illusion Technique: Parasite Feast
    Type: Illusion/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage: 80 mental damage
    Description: This technique relies on making the opponent believe that they are infected with a staggering amount of flesh consuming parasites. This technique does not affect the opponent's whole body but only a specific part of their body to enable the opponent to still be able to fight while the illusion is affecting them. For any part of the body below the head, the technique will consume the body part in its entirety. If the user was to choose a specific limb, then the whole limb would be consumed but only that limb. If the user was to choose the thorax or the abdomen, then the chosen part would consumed in its entirety. But for body parts on the head, the user must be specific. He can only choose one specific feature on the victim's head such as mouth, eyes, nose, etc and only the specific chosen part will be consumed. When this illusion affects the head, the head itself becomes a subsection and the user can only use features on it, not the whole thing. The user will perform two hand seals applying the illusion onto the opponent, the user must have sight of the opponent's body in order for this technique to work. Whatever body part that the user designed the illusion to affect will immediately begin transforming in the opponent's mind and begin rotting away. The user can manipulate the illusion to transform that body part to become grotesque making it difficult for the opponent to even look at the body part. The body part will no longer be in the opponent's control, it will cease to function properly, and will begin to cause tremendous mental damage to the victim that will cause the opponent to collapse due to overwhelming stress at the start of the user's next turn (if the opponent is able to break the illusion during his turn in between then this does not apply). The illusion only affects one part of the opponent's body but they cannot use any techniques involving that body part in any way immediately after the technique is activated, but they can still use the rest of their body.
    ~Can only be used three times per battle, no other genjutsu can be used while this one is active.

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    Cutting out up to three limbs or their eyes and other senses is strong enough. Remove the stress collapse.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by naruto uzumaki bujii sage View Post
    Ration: Ryū-Ken
    (Dengeki Jigoku Dama): Electric Hell Sphere
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    Description: The user preforms the required hand seals Ram → Ox → Bird, Once this done the user brings his hands close together as he channels a high amount of chakra between them, Causing a ball of lightning chakra to form inside of the users hands, The user then pushes forward into the air sending the ball shooting forward at very high speeds, The user can do two things now, He can direct the ball freely with hand gestures and hit the target causing maximum damage or the user can the slams his hands together causing the ball of lightning to spilt into ten different parts which the user can control freely with finger movements, Once the little balls of lightning come crashing into the target(s) they send out a massive shock into the target.


    ~ Declined, no restrictions ? ~
    (Dengeki Jigoku Dama) Electric Hell Sphere
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user preforms the required hand seals Ram → Ox → Bird, Once this done the user brings his hands close together as he channels a high amount of chakra between them, Causing a ball of lightning chakra to form inside of the users hands, The user then pushes forward into the air sending the ball shooting forward at very high speeds, The user can do two things now, He can direct the ball freely with hand gestures and hit the target causing maximum damage or the user can the slams his hands together causing the ball of lightning to spilt into ten different parts which the user can control freely with finger movements, Once the little balls of lightning come crashing into the target(s) they send out a massive shock into the target.

    Note: Can only be used three times per battle.

    Note: The user must wait at least one turn in between uses.


    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    More restrictions please.

    ======

    (Hōgyoku no Megumi) Crystal blessing
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Sort-Mid
    Chakra:20
    Damage:N/A
    Description: Guren makes a single hand seal using one hand, Once this is done she condenses the air particles around her up to mid range creating a dense dark pink mist, This is because this mist is formed of thousands of tiny pink crystal mirrors, these crystal mirrors are full of chakra and have a highly reflective surface. Due to the crystal mirrors being infused with the users chakra it can effectively hide the user form both the Sharingan and the Rinnegan, Due to the highly reflectively nature of the tiny mirrors it can confuse the Byakugan causing it to see thousands of different reflected images, Causing the byakugan to become unable to distinguish anything properly.

    Note: Stay on the feild for three turns unless blown away.
    Note: Can only be used four times per battle.

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    How exactly do crystals randomly form by 'condensing' the air ?

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    (Hōgyoku no Keiyaku)Crystal Promise
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra:50
    Damage:90 (+ 40 to the user)
    Description:Guren preforms four hand seals and then claps her hand together, As she does this she starts sending a massive amount of chakra into the air long range from her current location, A gigantic crystal structure starts to form in the sky, The crystal structure takes two turns to fully form and during this the guren must not use any other jutsu and always have her hands clapped together. Once the two turns are up, Guren makes the snake hand seal sending the structure flying down with great speed and momentum, The user can either make the tiger hand seal causing the structure to shatter and rain down a shower of sharp crystal glass or she can make the ox hand seal causing the structure to start rotating at extremely high speeds crashing into the ground creating a massive 30 foot Creator as it's sends out a powerful shock wave. After this is complete guren passes out for two turns due to the high charka use, When she recovers she is also unable to use any justu above A-rank.

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    A massive 30 foot Creator ? o_O
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by mist01 View Post
    Changed the placement of the picture and added Japanese name

    (Bo no Elendil) - Bow of Elendil
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80(-20 if splited)
    Description: Bow of Elendil is a 70" metallic chakra bow made of adamantium with up to 35" draw length. it has a reddish color with body frame like that of a dragon's scales. It also has sharp spikes all over the curves except for the hilt in the middle which serves as the handle. the string is made of a thin metallic spring that draws doton chakra from the users hand thereby forming an arrow made of thick dense earth as the user pulls it. the arrow that it shoots been mainly pure earth chakra is fast and precise and can pierce through any form of defense except jutsus of its equivalent, Lightning, shields of metal which the bow itself was made(adamantium).
    Picture:

    Abilities:
    +-the spikes can be used to slash and pierce opponent in close range.
    +-because of its metallic composition, it is indestructible
    +-can fire up to 8 arrows at once but the power is halved for each arrow
    +-can be combined(coated) with fire and lightning(+10 damage)
    Restrictions:
    +-can't use elemental techniques when using this since the wielder won't be able to do hand seals except its elemental combinations which can only come as projectiles.
    +-Firing 8 arrows at a time strains the user so it wont be useable until after 2 turns.
    +-when bow is used once, it counts as a move out of the 3 moves.
    +-Usable up to 3times only per battle.
    +-can only be wield and only listen to Mist01

    ~ Declined, I doubt you can pierce advanced dense CE that are not adamantium ~


    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Turiyon) Summoning technique: Turion
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementay
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 35
    Damage Point: N/A
    Description: The user uses his/her own blood and slams his hand on the ground to summon Turion. Turion is a big Lesser Bird of Paradise in the size of sasuke's hawk. Turion has a rare blue color which allows her to blend with the sky traceable by doujutsus only. Turion has strong light wings which allows her to move at a very fast speed and she can travel through dense wind. Turion can use wind and fire up to A-rank which can be exhale from her mouth of by flapping her wings.
    -Turion can only be summoned when there are no more than one bird of paradise summoned
    -Turion can only use fire and wind jutsu up to A-rank.
    -each jutsu counts as one out of the jutsus per turn.
    -Last on the battle field for 5 turns or if released by the summoner.

    ~ Approved ~

    Contract here



    (Fuuton: raidingu za nami) - Wind Style : Riding the wave
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User makes 3 hand seals and creates a narrow gust of wind towards a direction then forms under his/her feet, a condense wind chakra in the shape of a skate board. The user will then move/ride the gust in the direction of the wind.
    -note-
    +- the User can't perform another wind techniques while using this.
    +-Stays active for just a turn, meaning on the next turn user has to re-perform the jutsu but now with only one hand-seal to keep it active or deactivates with the user's will
    +-Can only be used 4 times per battle. This also counts for every time the jutsu is reactivated.
    +-Can be taught only by Mist01

    ~ Declined, riding it up to long-range ? No. In fact I'd think mid-range is still too much, maybe a few meters or so max. ~

    (Bo no Elendil) - Bow of Elendil
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80(-20 if splited)
    Description: Bow of Elendil is a 70" metallic chakra bow made of adamantium with up to 35" draw length. it has a reddish color with body frame like that of a dragon's scales. It also has sharp spikes all over the curves except for the hilt in the middle which serves as the handle. the string is made of a thin metallic spring that draws doton chakra from the users hand thereby forming an arrow made of thick dense earth as the user pulls it. the arrow that it shoots been mainly pure earth chakra is fast and precise and can pierce through any form of earth (S-rank downwards) but the arrows are weak to Lightning.
    Picture:

    Abilities:
    +-the spikes can be used to slash and pierce opponent in close range.
    +-because of the metallic composition of the bow, it is indestructible
    +-can fire up to 8 arrows at once but the power is halved for each arrow
    +-can be combined(coated) with fire and lightning(+10 damage)
    Restrictions:
    +-can't use elemental techniques when using this since the wielder won't be able to do hand seals except its elemental combinations which can only come as projectiles.
    +-Firing 8 arrows at a time strains the user so it wont be useable until after 2 turns.
    +-when bow is used once, it counts as a move out of the 3 moves.
    +-Usable up to 5times per battle.
    +-can only be wield and only listen to Mist01

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    Based on your description there is no reason why a simple arrow made of earth can pierce anything. Also, all forms of earth up to S rank is open to abuse.


    (Fuuton: raidingu za nami) - Wind Style : Riding the wave
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid(20meters max.)
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User makes two hand seals and creates a narrow gust of wind towards a direction then forms under his/her feet, a condense wind chakra in the shape of a skate board. The user will then move/ride the gust in the direction of the wind.
    -note-
    +- the User can't perform another wind techniques while using this.
    +-Stays active for just a turn, meaning on the next turn user has to re-perform the jutsu but now with only one hand-seal to keep it active or deactivates with the user's will
    +-Can only be used 4 times per battle. This also counts for every time the jutsu is reactivated.
    +-Can be taught only by Mist01

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    No resubmit. When I tell you that I think 'a few meters max' is the best range, and you persist in putting it up to mid-range, which by the way is only up to 5 meters or so, not 20, I think you either don't know the first thing about ranges in battle situations or you don't want to listen to me and want to sneak in OP stuff.


    ------new submission------

    (Hãyaton: Banpaia Suleya Mo-do ) - Swift Release: Vampire Slayer Mode
    Type: Sup
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Point: N/A
    Description: The user kneads swift chakra all over his body and inbues it into his sense organs.
    -+ Eyes: the users eye movement is very fast and can follow moves at swift speed. It also stays sharp making it see from far distances.
    -+ Ears: the user would have increased audible range allowing him to hear the slightest of sound.
    -+ Chakra Moulding: the user is able to mold chakra at a very fast speed and also gains increased handseals speed.
    However the user's physical strenght is not increased during this mode.
    -note-
    --Must be a swift user to use
    --Can only be used once per battle.
    --Last for 5 turns unless turned off.
    --Must have mastered swift release.
    --Can't use Wind and lightning techniques while this jutsu is active.
    --Teachable only by Mist01

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    No resubmit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    ( Hakke Īgurufuraito ) -
    8 Trigrams: Eagle flight

    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description:
    The user forces chakra into a weapon such as a kunai, sword, fan etc. Then throws it, as the weapon is being thrown the user manipulates the chakra to create a sharp cloak of chakra around it and mold the cloak to create eagles wings. With the winged cloak of chakra around the weapon the user is able to freely control where the projectile weapon goes and the weapons cutting power increases enough to cut through B-rank stone and still cut off a limb.

    - Can only be taught by William24
    - Can only be used three times.
    - Can only cut through B-rank and lower techniques
    - The eagle cloak lasts one turn

    .______________
    ~ Declined ~
    Limit the size of the weapons please



    -------------------------——-------------------------------------

    Summoning animal: Kangaroo
    Scroll owner: William24
    Other users who have signed contract: none
    Summoning boss if existing: None yet
    Other animals tied to contract: None

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Contract exists

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    ( Genjutsu: Igai-sei ) -
    Illusion art: Element of surprise

    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive, Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description:
    The user first performs 3 hand seals (Ox-Tiger-Snake) then inserts chakra into the opponents brain. From there the opponents Sense of sight will be manipulated in order to make ONE chosen element invisible to his/her VISION. For example, if you choose lightning to be invisible the victim of the illusion would not be able to see any electricity of any sort, but could still feel, hear, smell it etc..

    • Can only be taught by william24
    • Lasts 3 turns (if not broken)
    • Can NOT work on the Earth element.

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    Unallowed font-formatting.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    皇鮫后 Same -Tiburón
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    Tiburon; Spanish for "Shark", Japanese for "Imperial Shark Empress". A sword made out of steel and is indestructable and being able to resist very high heat levels without melting or getting any type of damage, Its unusually wide and has the distinction of being completely hollow in the middle where the user can channel elemental chakra into, essentially consisting of nothing more than the edges of what would otherwise be a normal sword. Its handle is purple and its guard is as wide as its blade, with three small holes on either end that Crow. uses to unsheathe it. Oddly, the sword is longer than its sheath. It is worn horizontally on his upper back.

    Sword Abilities:
    - (Suiton: Hahonryuu) - Water Style: Destruction Torrent can also be used with the sword without having to perform the handseals instead just channeling suiton chakra into the hollow part and moving the sword in small rotations creating the vortex, also improving it by 1 rank.
    - Tiburon also carries a unique ability named "Hirviendo" (Demono) wich allowes it to adapt fire chakra by having the user channel it into the hollow part to the point where the entire sword with the exception of the handle gets amazingly heated, then the user just points it foward and the sword releases and invisble layer of blazing fire that instantly boils any form of B rank water & C rank ice technique, turning the water techniques into pure vapor, while turning the ice techniques into regular water rendering it useless.

    Resctrictions:
    - All abilities of the Sword count towards 1 of the 3 moves per turn of the user, and don't require hand seals if the user is wielding the sword on his hands.
    - The Sword can only be wielded by Gazelle.. , and he can't allow others to use it because the sword only reacts to his chakra.
    - "Hirviendo" (Demono) Can only be used 2 Times per battle.
    - Must wait 3 turns before using "Hirviendo" (Demono) for the second time.

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    No Japanese characters.

    (Kuchiyose: Semai bu-bi) - Summoning: Nazca Booby
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    The user bites his finger and with use of the blood performs one hand seal (Bird) and hitting his right or left shoulder summoning The Nazca Booby also the smallest booby of the family, its size is no bigger that Ma & Pa's size, he is roughly the same size as them he is tied to the user by there chakra, meaning it can only get off the shoulder if ordered by his summoner of by his own will. By seeing how he had no good elemental affinity, with hard training in the Bird land he has learned to notest when his summoner is in a genjutsu due to there chakra being linked, and can insert chakra of itself into his summoner being able to Break through B rank and lower genjutsu.

    - Can only be summoned for 4-turns and once per battle.
    - Can be summoned if there is other Booby bird on the Field. Aslong as it isn't the chief (Blue Footed Booby, already created and approved).
    - Must be a signer or the Holder of the Booby Bird contract to summon.
    - Genjutsu Breaking Ability counts as 1 of the 3 techniques per turn of the user.
    - Genjutsu breaking Ability can only be used 2 times per battle.
    - Approved Contract & Summons tied to It.

    ______________
    ~ Approved ~
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by black uchiha View Post

    (Konchū shinkei kuranpu) Insect Nerve Clamp
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The insect that are inside the user’s body are immune to genjutsu. And when they sense the user is under a genjustu, bugs clamp a nerve inside the user’s body. This clamping sends enough pain to break the genjutsu without permanently injuring the user, once out of the genjutsu the bugs release the nerve.
    - Can only be used 4 times per battle
    - Must be a bug user
    – Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Soooo, why is this long range and why is it S-Rank and why does it do full damage to you?besides, if a nerve is clamped from inside your body it has great consequences in terms of mobility and sensitivity of the area that nerve pertains to.

    (Bītorumōdo) Beetle Mode
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80 (to the user upon deactivation)
    Description: Beetle Mode(BM) is achieved by the balanced combination of a ninja's chakra with the spiritual energy. The user, unlike most modes, doesn’t have to stand still in a motionless state and gathers up chakra. The user will draw in the chakra and mix them both. This takes time to achieve (1 turn). When the user has achieved BM, the user’s skin becomes dark and harden throughout his body like an exoskeleton of a beetle, capable of blocking normal weapons and withstanding C-rank and below attacks (Earth, water, and wind only). His eyes become jet black compound eyes (like that of beetles), as such the user is granted the ability to track fast movements (not as well as the Sharingan; 2 tome at best (compound eye link ). The user’s nails will turn black and sharp and his hair will grow into a harden horn on the user’s head. BM gives the user boosted strength to lift several times his own body weight (like the rhinoceros beetles), his speed will be lowered slightly due to the dense skin that dons him but he will be able to react much quicker than a normal ninja due to the compound eye. This mode gives the user a +10 boost to Ninjutsu. After deactivation the user will become motionless and restrained for 1 turn (the backlash of not having to be motionless to achieve BM) and have to shed his now brittle skin in the next turn (counting as a move). The user will also be drained of chakra and can only use C-rank and below jutsu for a short time (3 turns).
    - Can only use once per battle
    - Only last 4 turns
    - Takes 1 turn to achieve BM
    - Can only withstand 2 C-rank attacks
    - Withstood attacks can only be earth, water, and wind
    - The user can’t move for 1 turn after the BM deactivation
    - The user takes 80 damage upon deactivation
    - The shedding of the skin counts as one of the user’s 3 moves
    - Can only use C-rank and below jutsu for 3 turns after the shedding (due to chakra loss)
    - Can’t use Fire techniques while in BM
    - Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract for 2 months

    contract link

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    ±± Declined ±±
    Ok... First things first. Chakra, as you should know, is the passive, every occurring combination of 2 energies: spiritual and physical. Saying that you mix your chakra with the spiritual energy doesn't make sense. Also, only modes that enable you to use natural energy require you to be still. You get these compound eyes but how? You failed to explain. Just because you have a beetle contract doesn't mean you can transform your eyes into a makeshift dojuutsu.

    (Konchū sutairu: Tekitai-teki baishū) Insect Style: Hostile Takeover
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack
    Range: All
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (50 to user)
    Description: The user releases a pheromone of his own inside and around his body to excite the insects to go into an near uncontrollable state. Once in this state the insects forsake their chakra only diet, and devour any solid mass (earth/metal/ice...etc) in seconds. The insects suck up 60% of the users chakra before they burst from within the user and gourd in all directions, injuring the user badly and only leaving him with seventeen insect within to replenish their numbers. The insects release the absorbed chakra to protect them from attacks S-rank and below of any nature.
    - Can only be used once per battle
    - Works on all bugs under the users control
    - Can't use insect jutsu until Insect Cocoon is used twice
    - Lasts for 1 turn then the bugs die off
    - Can only withstand 2 S-rank attacks
    - Only B-rank and below techs for 2 turns, due to fatigue.


    Note: The fact that Shino's bugs ate thru 4-5 metal ships in seconds, in the 2nd shippuden movie Bonds is what makes it plausible.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Take the "can only withstand 2 S-Rank attacks" and this technique can be overcome by the normal weaknesses of bug techniques. It just happens to be Forbidden ranked.

    Resubmits


    (Konchū shinkei kuranpu) Insect Nerve Clamp
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Close
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 10
    Description: The insect that are inside the user’s body are immune to genjutsu. And when they sense the user is under a genjustu, bugs clamp a nerve inside the user’s body; ones connected to the toe. This clamping sends enough pain to break the genjutsu but injures the user leaving that part unusable for 3 turns, once out of the genjutsu the bugs release the nerve.
    - Can only be used 4 times per battle
    - Must be a bug user
    – Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    Various genjutsu require various levels of pain to break out of, some requiring more than an injured toe

    (Bītorumōdo) Beetle Mode
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80 (to the user upon deactivation)
    Description:Beetle Mode(BM) is achieved by the balanced combination of a ninja's chakra with the natural energy . The user, like most modes, has to stand still in a motionless state and gathers up chakra. The user will draw in the natural energy and mix it with his chakra. This takes time to achieve (1 turn). When the user has achieved BM he takes on the attributes of the Rhinoceros Beetle, the user’s skin becomes dark and harden throughout his body like an exoskeleton of a beetle, capable of blocking normal weapons and withstanding C-rank and below attacks (Earth, water, and wind only). His eyes become jet black compound eyes (like that of beetles), as such the user is granted the ability to track fast movements (not as well as the Sharingan; 2 tome at best (compound eye link ). The user’s nails will turn black and sharp and his hair will grow into a harden horn on the user’s head. BM gives the user boosted strength to lift several times his own body weight (like the rhinoceros beetles), his speed will be lowered slightly due to the dense skin that dons him but he will be able to react much quicker than a normal ninja due to the compound eye. This mode gives the user a +10 boost to Ninjutsu. After deactivation the user will become motionless and restrained for 1 turn and have to shed his now brittle skin in the next turn (counting as a move). The user will also be drained of chakra and can only use C-rank and below jutsu for a short time (3 turns).
    - Can only use once per battle
    - Only last 4 turns
    - Takes 1 turn to achieve BM
    - Can only withstand 2 C-rank attacks
    - Withstood attacks can only be earth, water, and wind
    - The user can’t move for 1 turn after the BM deactivation
    - The user takes 80 damage upon deactivation
    - The shedding of the skin counts as one of the user’s 3 moves
    - Can only use C-rank and below jutsu for 3 turns after the shedding (due to chakra loss)
    - Can’t use Fire techniques while in BM
    - Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract for 2 months

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    The first few sentences are an exact ripoff of SM. One more chance and then it's no resubmit.

    contract link


    (Konchū sutairu: Tekitai-teki baishū) Insect Style: Hostile Takeover
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack
    Range: All
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (50 to user)
    Description: The user releases a pheromone of his own inside and around his body to excite the insects to go into an near uncontrollable state. Once in this state the insects forsake their chakra only diet, and devour any solid mass (earth/metal/ice...etc) in seconds. The insects suck up 60% of the users chakra before they burst from within the user and gourd in all directions, injuring the user badly and only leaving him with seventeen insect within to replenish their numbers. The insects release the absorbed chakra to protect them from attacks S-rank and below of any nature.
    - Can only be used once per battle
    - Works on all bugs under the users control
    - Can't use insect jutsu until Insect Cocoon is used twice
    - Lasts for 1 turn then the bugs die off
    - Can only withstand 1 S-rank attacks (due to chakra coating)
    - Chakra coating only last 1 turn or untill hit by S-rank attack and can be stopped by normal weaknesses of bug techniques
    - Only B-rank and below techs for 2 turns, due to fatigue.

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    Quote the other techniques where this chakra coating was approved.

    Note: The fact that Shino's bugs ate thru 4-5 metal ships in seconds, in the 2nd shippuden movie Bonds is what makes it plausible.

    The chakra is used to shield the bugs like in othe bug tech that were approved by you and other mods...hence the 60% drain
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Doton: Kasui Seisha)-Earth Release: Spike Volley
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will perform the Snake>Ox hand seals and the a small patch of ground up to mid range from the enemy will form into medium sized sharp spikes that are angled towards them. They will then shoot a volley of sharp rocks at the enemy, attempting to impale them. The spikes will then later reform their tips and with another Snake hand seal they can shoot more volleys at the enemy, shifting themselves to aim at the opponent as long as they stay in mid-range from the original location of their creation. The spikes will remain indefinitely as long as they are not destroyed.

    Note:
    ~A use of this jutsu after the initial volley does not count towards your 3 jutsu limit.
    ~Two volleys cannot be fired consecutively due to the tips reforming.(Can be used again after the completion of a different jutsu by either the user or opponent.)
    ~Can only be taught by xHoudinii

    My first CJ ^_^
    ~Declined~ The bolded is a no.
    (Doton: Kasui Seisha)-Earth Release: Spike Volley
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will perform the Snake>Ox hand seals and the a small patch of ground up to mid range from the enemy will form silently into medium sized sharp spikes that are angled towards them. They will then shoot a volley of sharp rocks at the enemy, attempting to impale them. The spikes will then later reform their tips and with another Snake hand seal they can shoot more volleys at the enemy, shifting themselves to aim at the opponent as long as they stay in mid-range from the original location of their creation. The spikes will remain indefinitely as long as they are not destroyed.

    Note:
    ~Can only be used once per turn due to the tips reforming
    ~Can only be taught by xHoudinii

    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    So..by continually using the snake handseal you can keep sending volleys out ? Or does the restriction mean that you can only send one volley per turn ? If so, clear that up.

    Removed the first note and changed the second.
    I also added that the spikes form silently, if its unapprovable with that feel free to remove it.

    New Submission:

    (Futon: Jixyoushou)-Wind Release: Updraft
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description:The user will clap their hands together sending out a powerful transparent pulse of wind, the wind will travel towards the target while staying close to the ground. Winds natural intangibility allows this technique to travel over and around small obstructions and still stay on course. As it reaches the target it creates a powerful updraft that goes straight up, blowing the target ten meters up into the air.

    Note:
    ~Can only be used 3 times
    ~ The nature of the updraft sends the target spinning and twisting into the air, making it very difficult to get ones bearings once the technqiue has hit.
    ~Can only be taught by xHoudinii

    ______________
    ~ Approved ~
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Oshie sono Gekiryuu Yajuu: Shuukyoku | Teachings of the Raging Beast: Finale
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    Known as the strongest technique in the teachings, this move is forbidden for use. While the user is in "Four Legged Technique" he will unleash 90% of his chakra into the already existing coat of chakra into the users muscles, skin, nails, hair, basically all over the body (same concept as the 4legged) The user will gain speeds that are unimaginable to any other Inuzuka, the strength, the reflex, the flexibility is pushed to the utmost limits while entering this final Hail Mary. When the user enters this sudden burst of power, their whole body changes even beyond the point of being in the most advanced form of "Four Legged Technique" The users will take on the closest form to a wolf without actually turning into one. Chakra coats them looking like a wolf while their hair is extremely beast-like as well as their teeth form almost into a full wolves jaw, the same goes for the joints and skin. This highly advanced technique does come with extreme repercussions, while in this mode the user cannot use any form of ninjutsu or genjutsu. Once out of this mode the user will be exhausted to the closest point of defeat. However with that great power comes of it, ability to cover ground that the normal eye cannot track.

    Notes:
    - Lasts 3 turns
    - Speed is fast enough to the point that only 1t sharingan can track
    - Only taijutsu and Inuzuka techniques are allowed in this form
    - Once mode is complete 90% of the user chakra is relinquished
    - Unable to use any elements, ninjutsu, or genjutsu
    - Must be in 4legged tech
    - Only usable by a master Inuzuka clan member
    - Must have mastered "Lost Teachings of the Raging Beast"
    - Has to be used within the first 5 turns of battle or unable to be used after that point
    - Must be Kage ranked
    - Only usable once per battle

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Overrestricted and too high a rank for the purpose you want from it. Its a last resort move that doesn't power you that much to be honest. The 90% chakra stuff...whats that of use in our rp? Take it out. This should be an S-rank and more reasonable restrictions. Its not that strong of a boost to make it cost this much to you.
    Oshie sono Gekiryuu Yajuu: Fenrir | Teachings of the Raging Beast: Fenrir
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A (+10 Inuzuka techniques, +15 Taijutsu)
    Description:
    Known as the strongest technique in the teachings, this move is forbidden for use. While the user is in "Four Legged Technique" he will unleash his chakra into the already existing coat of chakra into the users muscles, skin, nails, hair, basically all over the body (same concept as the 4legged) The user will gain speeds that are unimaginable to any other Inuzuka, the strength, the reflex, the flexibility is pushed to the utmost limits, playing off the Inuzuka ability to preform Taijutsu and clan techs at a much stronger level. When the user enters this sudden burst of power, their whole body changes even beyond the point of being in the most advanced form of "Four Legged Technique" The users will take on the closest form to a wolf without actually turning into one. Chakra coats them looking like a wolf while their hair is extremely beast-like as well as their teeth form almost into a full wolves jaw, the same goes for the joints and skin, they're to portray the ancient wolf god - Fenrir. This highly advanced technique does come with repercussions, while in this mode the user cannot use any form of ninjutsu or genjutsu. However with that great power comes of it, ability to cover ground that the normal eye cannot track.

    Notes:
    - Lasts 4 turns
    - User's speed can only be tracked by either EIG users or Dojutsu users
    - Only Taijutsu and Inuzuka techniques are allowed in this form
    - Must be in 4legged tech
    - Only usable by a master Inuzuka clan member
    - Must have mastered "Lost Teachings of the Raging Beast"
    - Only usable once per battle

    ______________
    ±± Approved ±±
    Tweeked one of the restrictions to make it more reasonable and clear.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Bakuton: Nendo ta Shishō)- Explosion Release: Clay Polymelia
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will put a single hand in their side pouches filled with clay, and then release the clay from their palms. The thin thread of released clay will travel onto the user's back, where it will then begin to rapidly sprout two complete, large and muscular pairs of arms. After the arms complete their formation, the user does not have to continually manipulate the arms. These clay arms have a full reach of two meters, and a single clay arm is powerful enough to hold the entirety of the user's weight off of the ground. At the end of each clay arm is a hand that is capable of being individually detonated with the performance of a single hand seal. The explosion has the force of a single c1 bomb. These hands can also then regenerate from the present clay in the arms. The clay arms have a variety of uses, from accurately throwing multiple kunai, to engaging the enemy in close combat.
    Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile
    Note: Usable three times per battle
    Note: No clay techniques above A-rank the same turn

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    How long do they last? And are you sure you want to have 2 giant bombs strapped to your back? Because they are still explosive clay and as such they can still be detonated by tons of customs out there.
     
         
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    Fire Proof, Combustible Gloves (Taika-sei, kanen-sei tebukuro)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A (+10 to Punches when lit)
    Description: hese are Special made gloves. They are gloves that can be lit on fire to increase the damage from a punch and cause serious burns. The gloves protects the hands from the fire. When they are lit on fire the user with get +10 extra Damage to their punches.




    ______________
    ±± Approved ±±


    Fire Release : Flame Propulsion (Katon: Honoo Suishin)
    Type : Supplementary
    Rank : D
    Chakra : 10
    Damage : N/A
    Description: The user focuses their Fire chakra into their hand. The user can then release flames from there hand to avoid attacks, Launch them selves into the air or change direction in the air.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Similar technique exists

    Fire Release : Hell Chains (Katon: Heru Kusari)
    Type: Offence, Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user focuses their Fire chakra into their hand. They will then release it in the form of chains composed completely of fire. The chains can used grab and pull objects or people toward the user and also causing sevier burns on whatever it grabs.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Range? Follow proper template please.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Resubmitting
    (Katon - Makai Kuchisaki) - Fire Release- Hells mouth

    (Katon - Makai Kuchisaki) - Fire Release- Hells mouth
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user begins by performing the handseals Ram-Dog-Horse-Tiger. The user them shoots out a large amount of intense flames that is manipulated into a demon like head that swallows the opponent. The user can choose to trap the opponent in the demons mouth, burning their body or choose for the head to explode.

    Note
    ~ Can only be taught by sage naruto 123
    Can only be used three times in a battle

    ~ Declined; mid-long ? So its useless at short range ? Why ? ~
    (Katon - Makai Kuchisaki) - Fire Release- Hells mouth
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user begins by performing the handseals Ram-Dog-Horse-Tiger. The user them shoots out a large amount of intense flames that is manipulated into a demon like head that swallows the opponent. The user can choose to trap the opponent in the demons mouth, burning their body or choose for the head to explode.

    I changed the range.

    Note

    ~Can only be used three times in a battle~
    ~ The user can't use any B rank or higher fire jutsu's for the next turn~
    ~Can only be taught by - Cerberus-~

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Similar to a multitude of techniques already made.

    (Katon -Makai Inu) - Fire Release- Hells Dog
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user begins by performing the Horse-Ram-Hare-Serpent hand seals. Once completed the user spews out a large amount of fire that takes form as a huge 3 headed dog. Each head of the dog is able to shoot out B rank fire balls. The sheer heat emitted from the dog can leave a grown man unconscious if too close.

    Note

    ~ The user can't use any B rank or higher fire jutsu's for the next turn~
    ~Can only be used twice in a battle.
    ~Can only be taught by - Cerberus- ~

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Remove the part i put in blue and also add a duration to this.

    Mushiton - Mushiton Sakini- Bugs away
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: The user begins by pulling out two paper bombs in each hand behind their back. Once pulled out the user covers the paper bombs in an orb of bugs and sends them at the opponent.

    Note

    Can only be taught by -Cerberus-

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Improper name. Also, what do you want to achieve with this? IT has no use other than the normal paper bombs.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Kuchiyose: Tsuchinoko) ~ Summoning: Tsuchinoko
    Rank: A
    Typeffence
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will hold his arm straight down in his sleeves having a rolled up snake appear, just like how snakes would appear from the sleeves. As the snake reached his palm, the user may throw the rolled up snake towards the enemy. As its traveling through the air, due to having special scales on its body, he may blend in with the environment just like a chameleon. Once it flew within short range of the enemy, the snake will straighten and expand fast from a size of a ball into a 5-6 meter thick snake and wrap itself around the enemy like a tentacle. As about to wrap around the enemy, it will start to release toxins from underneath the scales, having the toxin enter the body as it has wrapped around the enemy. The toxin will gather up around the chakra cells and when it makes contact with the enemie's chakra, it will multiply. The more the user try to release chakra, the more toxin would expand around the body, effectively sealing the tenketsus, paralyzing the body as long as the snake ensnared him.
    ~Note: Can be summoned 2x
    ~Note: Must have signed snake contract
    ~Note: No other snakes while this snake is on the field.
    ~Note: No s-ranked snake or higher for a turn after this snake has disappeared.
    ~Note: Can be taught by House

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Link to signing the snake contract

    (Fuuton: Sēji no fūkō ) Wind Release: Envelopment of the Ground
    Rank: S
    Type: Offence
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user channels enormous amounts of fuuton within the ground underneath the opponent. The user makes a handseal and all the fuuton chakra collected under the opponent will push all the rocks upwards with the enemy standing on it, as this will create a tremor. As the fuuton carries the rocks upwards, wind will push the rocks from around. The rocks rises around the enemy because of that, thus enveloping the enemy and crushing him, creating a sphere from an outside view.
    Note: Can be used 3x
    Note: Won't be able to use S-ranked or higher wind for the next turn.
    Note: Can be taught by House

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Done countless times before in a multitude of different elements and ways.

    (fuuton: Shinkū bakudan)Wind Release: Vacuum Bomb
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Type: Offensive
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user focuses his chakra on any part of the field pulling air out of it, sufficient mastery of wind is required to do this as air need to be pulled out in an instant to create the desired effect. This creates a vacuum which pulls everything within to fill up the space, the pressure is strong enough to pull large objects from long range. Matter is crushed within the center and when the technique ends all the matter explodes in every direction in concussive blast of tremendous force.
    Note: Usable Twice.
    -Requires Wind Mastery.
    -No S rank the Wind the following turn.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    This becomes too similar to Kamui. Also, if we are to look at this again make it more reasonable please. You could simply pull off the head of an enemy or crush his body with this with great ease. Also Void is a CE that enables such moves also.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Blizzàrd View Post
    (Doton: Seis Fleur Kuracchi) Earth Release: Six Flower Clutch
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user makes six arms appear out of surface opponent's skin; two grab an opponent's legs and makes them fall backwards. Two pairs hold the foe up at their back, and a pair grabs his upper body. The pairs at the upper body and legs pull, cracking the foe's back.
    Note: Can be used thrice per battle.
    Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.

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    ±± Declined ±±
    You can't form earth from your opponents body just like that. You can either form earth from 3 sources: the portal in the sky (like dropping lid), existing earthen materials or your own body

    (Sono Touketsu Kiba) The Frozen Fang
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40 (+10 for the ability)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This sword is developed with Ice chakra. Some Myths state that this was made by the Angels themselves and gifted to Earth. The sword is 2 Meters long and shaped like a Persian Scimitar. It is sharped edged at the bottom and top. Some carvings are also done on one side of it which says "The Frozen Fang".
    Sword's speciality is that it has abundant flow of chakra and is able to communicate with its user like Samehade. Since the sword's blade is made out of ice it can be sliced, melted or shattered with Earth, Fire and Lightning chakras but if a constant flow of chakra is remained with the handle it has the ability to regenerate its ice blade. The regeneration of ice blade can also be done through barriers, for example; if the sword is thrusted in a wall its ability allows it to form on the other side given that there is direct contact between the user and the sword, and between the sword and the object. Sword's language is more like a whistle and it happens when the chakra is flowed through it. It indeed has cutting power of an S-ranked wind chakra and is able to extend to mid-range if the chakra is flowed through it.
    Note: Must be used by a Yuki member who possesses Ice as his/her speciality.
    Note: It can be regenerated 5 times in a battle.
    Note: Can only be wielded by Blizzard.
    Dropping & Updating; The Frozen Fang


    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    and if its in contact with an enemy it can simply materialize and pierce through him? No.
    (Doton: Seis Fleur Kuracchi) Earth Release: Six Flower Clutch
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user makes six arms appear out of a vertical portal behind the opponent ; two grab an opponent's legs and makes them fall backwards. Two pairs hold the foe up at their back, and a pair grabs his upper body. The pairs at the upper body and legs pull, cracking the foe's back.
    Note: Can be used 4 times per battle.
    Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.

    ______________
    ±± Approved ±±
    note however, that the portal will produce some sound and air displacement behind the opponent thus he'll still have a minor window of time to detect and counter. Upped it to 4 times per battle.

    (Sono Touketsu Kiba) The Frozen Fang
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40 (+10 for the ability)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This sword is developed with Ice chakra. Some Myths state that this was made by the Angels themselves and gifted to Earth. The sword is 2 Meters long and shaped like a Persian Scimitar. It is sharped edged at the bottom and top. Some carvings are also done on one side of it which says "The Frozen Fang".
    Sword's speciality is that it has abundant flow of chakra and is able to communicate with its user like Samehada. Since the sword's blade is made out of ice it can be sliced, melted or shattered with Earth, Fire and Lightning chakras but if a constant flow of chakra is remained with the handle it has the ability to regenerate its ice blade. The regeneration of ice blade can also be done through barriers, for example; if the sword is thrusted in a wall its ability allows it to form on the other side given that there is direct contact between the user and the sword, and between the sword and the object. Sword's language is more like a whistle and it happens when the chakra is flowed through it. It indeed has cutting power of an S-ranked wind chakra and is able to extend to mid-range if the chakra is flowed through it.
    Note: Must be used by a Yuki member who possesses Ice as his/her speciality.
    Note: Regeneration through objects can be hindered by greater rank chakra rank flow.
    Note: Can only be wielded by Blizzard.
    Dropping & Updating; The Frozen Fang

    Contact with enemy can occur sideways too? I dont think its always piercing through, its how you strategize. I wasn't clear so I wrote this note. Tell me if you want me to change something.

    ______________
    ±± Approved ±±


    ---- New Submission ----

    (Kuchiyose: To-rasu) Summoning: Taurus
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user channels his chakra, biting his thumb for mere blood simultaneously and after performing Ox he/she summons the Boss of the Bison contract, known as The God Bison or Taurus. Taurus is a moderate size bull who stands on two feet instead of using all four. Taurus, has his body covered with an earth armor and is considered as Earth Elemental Bison, or Earth God of Bisons. Taurus inheriting the traits of all the bisons, comes with amazingly good strength, but due to his humanoid figure he is not bulky but fast. Taurus has said to rule over Bisons over 200 years yet his body is as young as an full grown Bison. His power solely depends on Earth Element, having such mastery over Earth he is able to absorb Earth rank Jutsus, and using the chakra he could create an armored protection of the same rank over him or the owner of the contract who summoned him if he/she is in contact with Taurus body. Taurus's earth armor covers full body and comes over the head leaving holes for his horns to sprout out. When the chakra from the earth Jutsu is absorbed, it is either turned to dust from the solid form or into a solid rock from mud. Taurus can create only 1 Armor from each absorbed Jutsu, and the armor is of same rank as the absorbed Jutsu. Once the armor is wielded over the human body, lightning Jutsus are forbidden to be used, If used the Jutsu will effect Earth before going for the aim. If no armor is wielded Taurus can move up to Lee's speed without weights.
    Note: Can only absorb 3 Jutsus Chakras per battle.
    Note: Can only create 3 armors in total which are able to defend water Jutsu of one greater rank.
    Note: Can only be summoned once per battle.
    Note: Stays in battle for 5 turns after summoned.
    Note: Must have Bison summoning contract signed.

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    All the parts i put in blue need further explanation. He can absorb any earth technique? How would that work exactly? Can he absorb a mountain smash? Etc etc. Also, max 4 times per battle. Up to which rank can he absorb stuff? And the rock lee withough weights is a no no. He can move as fast as the fastest ninja can without any special training, meaning a Sage Rank, Taijutsu specialist. Leg weights is a special training now.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Kujira Suiton Izumi (whale water release fountain)
    Type: Summoning/ Supplimentary
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: After the user summons a Blue whale, the Whale uses it's suiton release to unleash a massive flow of water that fills a large area. It can be used for further water release techniques by the whale or user, or be used to turn a large area into a pool for the Whale to swim in.

    ~Requires blue whale contract.
    ~If used to make a pool or vessel of water, the area must be able to support it (I.E. you cant turn a flat grassy field into an ocean)
    ~Water remains in play for 5 turns before evaporating if simply left on the ground. If used to make a pool of water, lasts 7 turns

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    limitations? How many times can this be used?

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    Kuchiyuse:Tobias (Summoning:Tobias)
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: C
    Range:N/A
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    Tobias is a young Blue whale who is about 10 ft in leanght and weights 2 tons (4000 lbs). Tobias is capable of using water to move around on land though he is incapable of doing so unless there is enough water present. Tobias can use basic C rank water abilities such as water balls and water jets. He prefers to use his weight and ability to move fast with water to act as a living battering ram.

    ~To be able to move on land, their must either be a nearby water scource or the summoner must have used Kujira Suiton Izumi (Whale Water release fountain)
    ~Tobias is unable to use Whale water release fountain
    ~If Tobias remains on the ground without water for more then one turn, then he will exit the battle immediatly

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    This summon is useless except if you are in a water filled battle field. You sure you want this? besides the moving on earth part makes no sense.

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    Kuchiyuse:Jidambo (Summoning:Jidambo)
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: A
    Range:N/A
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    Jidambo is a small adult blue Whale, who is 50 ft long and wieghing 100 tons. He can use A rank water techniques. He is capable of moving on land so long as a large body of water is nearby, or Whale Water Release Fountain is used to get the water to propel his body. Using his fins he can unleash large water attacks such as waves or whirlpools. He can be summoned in the air to be dropped on oponents or the user can jump in his mouth to hide underwater.

    ~Can only be summoned twice per battle
    ~If left on the battlefield without water for more then one turn then he leaves immediatly.
    ~Can only keep the user underwater for 3 turns before comming up for air.

    Whale summoning contract here!

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    How long can he be on the field? You know that unless you are fighting in an ocean, this summon is too big to actually move in a normal battlefield, specially because it would need a gigantic amount of water. the waves and whirlpools he can create, how strong are they? they need to count towards your move count.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Link to Chainsaw Arts CFS-----> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...&postcount=171

    Surgery for the CFS------> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...38#post7801138

    Current bio with chains------> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=220341

    Chainsaw Arts: First Gear (Chenso Gigei: Saisho no Gia)
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: This is the first gear which is like a car(first gear, second gear, third gear etc) of Chainsaw Arts. The user channels their chakra into the chains that are located on both legs. The chakra sends the chains into rotation and give the users kicks more powerful and enabling them to cut through flesh and other soft materials quite easily. The user can even use this gear as transportation between villages to get there faster when on a mission then you would on foot. This gear can cut through B rank and below Earth Style techniques.

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    Chainsaw Arts: Second Gear (Chenso Gigei: Sekandogia)
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: This is the second gear which is like a car(first gear, second gear, third gear etc) of Chainsaw Arts. The user channels a great deal of chakra into the chains located on both legs. The chakra rotates the chains and giving the users kicks even more powerful kicks then Gear 1. This gear is able to cut through B rank and below Wood Style techniques.
    -Can only be used five times and must wait one turn to use this again.

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    Chainsaw Arts: Third Gear (Chenso Gigei: Sādogia)
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This is the third and final gear which is like a car(first gear, second gear, third gear etc) of Chainsaw Arts. The user channels a large amount of chakra into the chains located on both legs. The chakra sends the chains in rotation giving the users kicks more powerful then Gear 2. This is like a rare gear to see. This gear is able to cut through A rank and below Kaguya techniques.
    -Can only use it three times and must wait one turn to use this again.

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    ±± Approved ±±
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Thunderbolt View Post

    Kaze no sutairu: Suterusu bakuhatsu:Wind Style :Stealth Explosion
    Rank s
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Supplementary
    Chakra cost :40
    Damage points :80
    Description ; The user channel his chakra across his body, he then he focuses his channeled chakra on his hand and using chakra and shape manipulation makes hundreds of ants with wind embedded in them which he releases into the grounds which all contain a large amount of wind chakra engulfed or held in it and can stretch and explode and imploded .He then sends them undergrounds to gather and surround the enemy while remaining stealth and upon command explode at the same time causing a gigantic and huge enough blast to destroy and blast the opponent out of range or even the atmosphere. The user has full control of these creatures and can command them to explode or even retreat and abort the attack.

    Can only be done once a battle.
    Can only be taught by thunder bolt.
    The microbe Ants can easily be seen with a Byakugan or Sharingan.
    No wind jutsu can be used in that same cycle.

    I changed what you asked me to change.


    ~ Declined, what is a"microbe wind like ant creature" ? ~

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    Sorry but honestly, learn how to use periods, commas and how to produce sentences.

    (Korosu) Slay
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range
    :Supplementary
    Chakra cost:50
    Damage points: 90 [-20 to the user for each turn]
    Description

    Abilities Of the Swords
    SLAY it was a sword which length was 4.4 feet and weight was said to have exceeded 47 kilograms due to several ninja skills and building materials such as titanium and diamond embedded in the weapon. The sword is indestructible and can not be broken nor destroyed. It also contains porcelain which Is a material fused with metals to protect against high heating and melting temperatures. It has the unique ability of allowing the user to mix his chakra with the sword but unlike any other katana or sword when the slay strikes an opponent and the opponent is hit and the blood is spilled on the sword it marks the opponent blood and chakra signatures making it hard for the opponent to launch surprise attack on the user of the sword due to his presence being located or found by the sword.. The sword is capable of cutting, slashing, slicing and withstanding basic elemental and Ninjutsu attacks up to s rank. It can easily cut normal katana ,Rocks, Steel in half. However Like every jutsu or weapon it has its drawbacks and this one is that of a high risk which is due to the sword sharing or requiring chakra from the user to work the sword over time drains the user chakra and damages him .The sword can only be wielded by the sword wielder and know one else if anyone tries to pick it up it will emit a glowing like fire across the weapon so thus if the opponent where to touch it he will be burnt to death. The sword shares chakra signs and patterns with the user due to the continuous usage of the sword by the wielder. Thus can tell the wielder from a fake, this also means the sword can be thrown at any direction north or south but must return and still go back to the user he does this by using or marking the user chakra and using as a path to travel.

    I dropped the history and reworded it.


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    No forbidden ranked weapons. And same note as above

    ~ Declined, I can't understand the description, and please, please drop the history ~

    Raitoningusutairu: Furaitosutoraiku:Lightning Style:Flight strike

    Rank:A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost:30
    Damage points:60
    Description; The user channels his lightning chakra across his body distributing it equally to all parts as if it were an armor ,he then channels more of his lightning chakra into his two palms and dives forward in a frontal position to the opponent with his arms, which have been infused with pure lightning chakra toward the enemy, upon meet the user will slam his palms on the opponent chest slamming and pushing him backwards with great force.

    Can only be done once a battle.
    Can only be taught by Thunderbolt .

    I removed anything that is similar to raikage techniques and armor and remove the part that i said it boost reflexes.

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    ±± Declined ±±
    Similar technique exists.
    Resubmiiting
    (Korosu) Slay
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: s
    Range
    :Supplementary
    Chakra cost:40
    [B]Damage points:80
    Description

    Abilities Of the Swords
    SLAY it was a sword which length was 4.4 feet and weight was said to have exceeded 47 kilograms due to several ninja skills and building materials such as titanium and diamond embedded in the weapon. The sword is indestructible and can not be broken nor destroyed. It also contains porcelain which Is a material fused with metals to protect against high heating and melting temperatures. It has the unique ability of allowing the user to mix his chakra with the sword but unlike any other katana or sword when the slay strikes an opponent and the opponent is hit and the blood is spilled on the sword it marks the opponent blood and chakra signatures making it hard for the opponent to launch surprise attack on the user of the sword due to his presence being located or found by the sword.. The sword is capable of cutting, slashing, slicing and withstanding basic elemental and Ninjutsu attacks up to s rank. It can easily cut normal katana ,Rocks, Steel in half. However Like every jutsu or weapon it has its drawbacks and this one is that of a high risk which is due to the sword sharing or requiring chakra from the user to work the sword over time drains the user chakra and damages him .The sword can only be wielded by the sword wielder and know one else if anyone tries to pick it up it will emit a glowing like fire across the weapon so thus if the opponent where to touch it he will be burnt to death. The sword shares chakra signs and patterns with the user due to the continuous usage of the sword by the wielder. Thus can tell the wielder from a fake, this also means the sword can be thrown at any direction north or south but must return and still go back to the user he does this by using or marking the user chakra and using as a path to travel.

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    ±± Declined ±±
    Don't resubmit. If we who check this can't even understand it how do you want others to do so?

    Kaze no sutairu: Suterusu bakuhatsu:Wind Style :Stealth Explosion
    Rank s
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Supplementary
    Chakra cost :40
    Damage points :80
    Description ; The user channel his chakra across his body, he then he focuses his chakra on his hand and uses chakra and shape manipulation to make hundreds of ants with wind embedded in them which he then releases into the grounds.This ants all contain a large amount of wind chakra engulfed or held in it and can stretch and explode at any given point.The user of this jutsu send the ants undergrounds to gather and surround the Target while remaining stealth and upon command explode at the same time causing a gigantic and huge enough blast to destroy the terrain and blast the opponent out of range and crushing hsi bones.The user has full control of these creatures and can command them to explode or even retreat and abort the attack.

    Can only be done once a battle.
    Can only be taught by thunder bolt.
    The microbe Ants can easily be seen with a Byakugan or Sharingan.

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    ±± Declined ±±
    OP. Ants that are otherwise invisible unless you have a Dojuutsu and can explode like that? Nope. Also, Supplementary range is something i never heard about.

    This custom jutsu was only declined as stated by scorps because i did not use commas and complete sentence ,i reworded it and made it more read able.

    Kasai sutairu: Chimei-tekina o toiawase:Fire Style: Deadly Contact
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra costs: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user channels his katon chakra to his two hands and focuses them on his ten fingers, five fingers on each hand and upon close contact with the opponent the user infuse a certain amount of chakra into their body which is not noticeable at first and rarely hurts but as time goes the area of contact begins to burn and heat causing the opponent extreme pain until the point where the who hands are engulfed in flames and the opponent hand is damaged and can not be used in battle again.

    Note: Takes a turn for the jutsu to work
    Note: Can only be used once a battle
    Note: Must Have Mastered Katon and be specialized in it.
    Note: No s rank fire jutsu for the next turn.

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    ±± Declined ±±
    Makes utterly no sense. Don't resubmit.

    Note:I added both declined reason by emperor and scores, the first being emperor and the second scorps I reworded it and walked on my descriptions as they asked and other things. Please feel free to edit anything to get this approved.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Zanshin View Post
    Beowulf
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage points: (+ 15 to Taijutsu) (+ 5 to kenjutsu)
    Description: The Beowulf is a set of flash gauntlets and greaves that posses a very sharp spikes in several places in it's upper skin,each spike is a 70 cm tall.Most of the gauntlets and greaves have several colors within them but it's most color is white,It also has a combination of black and dim-gray color which spreads in different places.The gauntlets and greaves are made of special kind of steel,same kind that is used to create blades and swords.Beowulf's upper skin is as sharp as the blade of the katanas and sharp blades thus Beowulf's holder is able to defend against any sword strike using Beowulf just like any other sword in addition to being able to perform All type of Kenjutsu techniques perfectly using it.The greaves posses some kind of claws,these claws are very sharp and can cut a human's body into two pieces with a single strike of it.Beowulf isn't heavy and the user won't even notice it's wight while using it which means the user is able to move freely with it on without being a bother to the user of it.

    - Can only be wielded by Zanshin and who he allows
    - Requires a Mastery over Taijutsu and Kenjutsu
    - Must be atleast a Sannin to be able to wield it


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    ±± Declined ±±
    How does this boost Kenjutsu?


    [Kamisori] - Razor

    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: A powerful technique that fires an energy arc capable of cutting through materials and substances with relative ease. The user sends a wave of energy that moves towards the target and is capable of instantly changing direction.
    - Can only be used 3 times


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    ±± Declined ±±
    what is this? Katon? Raiton? Magic? Nothing?


    [Senkou Wakemae] - Flashing Shatter

    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary || Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user charges his weapon with his chakra after gathering a decent amount of it and channeling it to the user's weapon through his hand,creating a blinding flash as the weapon on his way towards the opponent.
    -When the flash starts to appear the opponent won't be able to see the user's weapon correctly and will see it several weapons as it's moving.
    -After the flash appear completely the opponent won't be able to see anything.
    -The user lasts blind for about a full turn.
    -Can not use it on the following turn.

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    ±± Declined ±±
    Don't resubmit.
    Beowulf
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage points: (+ 20 to Taijutsu)
    Description: The Beowulf is a set of flash gauntlets and greaves that posses a very sharp spikes in several places in it's upper skin,each spike is a 70 cm tall.Most of the gauntlets and greaves have several colors within them but it's most color is white,It also has a combination of black and dim-gray color which spreads in different places.The gauntlets and greaves are made of special kind of steel,same kind that is used to create blades and swords.Beowulf's upper skin is as sharp as the blade of the katanas and sharp blades thus Beowulf's holder is able to defend against any sword strike using Beowulf just like any other sword in addition to being able to perform All type of Kenjutsu techniques perfectly using it.The greaves posses some kind of claws,these claws are very sharp and can cut a human's body into two pieces with a single strike of it.Beowulf isn't heavy and the user won't even notice it's wight while using it which means the user is able to move freely with it on without being a bother to the user of it.

    - Can only be wielded by Zanshin and who he allows
    - Requires a Mastery over Taijutsu and Kenjutsu
    - Must be atleast a Sannin to be able to wield it


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    I still need you to explain how this adds a complete +20 damage to Taijutsu techniques.

    Removed boosting kenjutsu.


    [Kenjutsu: Kamisori] - Sword Arts: Razor

    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: A powerful technique that fires an energy arc capable of cutting through materials and substances with relative ease. The user sends a wave of pure chakra that moves towards the target and is capable of instantly changing direction.
    - Can only be used 3 times


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    ±± Declined ±±
    Similar technique already exists.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Summoning Animal: Giant silkworm moth, specifically the genus Lonomia
    Scroll Owner: Rune
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Lonomia Caterpillar (stage in development)
    Description and Background:
    The genus Lonomia is a moderate-sized group of fairly cryptic saturniid moths from South America. The caterpillars are themselves extremely cryptic, blending in against the bark of trees, where the larvae commonly aggregate. The larvae, like most hemileucines, are covered with urticating hairs, but these caterpillars possess a uniquely potent anticoagulant venom.
    The adults creates powder which temporarily blinds and opponent or conceals the summoner's movements. They are able to perform Fuuton techniques, which do not require handseals, with their wings and can also carry a summoner on their backs. The caterpillars are good taijutsu users, but their best attribute is their poisoned hairs, which can be utilised in a variety of ways.





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    I need you to resubmit explaining in your submission exactly the implications in terms of Narutobase's RPG of the anticoagulant venon but also the powder ability. Is it a basic ability shared by all of them that they can use without a technique? What are their limitations? Etc etc. Also, The fuuton part, take it out. That is to be submitted in each of your summons
    Summoning Animal: Giant silkworm moth, specifically the genus Lonomia
    Scroll Owner: Rune
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Lonomia Caterpillar (stage in development)
    Description and Background:
    The genus Lonomia is a moderate-sized group of fairly cryptic saturniid moths from South America. The caterpillars are themselves extremely cryptic, blending in against the bark of trees, where the larvae commonly aggregate. The larvae, like most hemileucines, are covered with urticating hairs, but these caterpillars possess a uniquely potent anticoagulant venom (upon touch it produces deep wounds and a burning sensation, although never fatal on itself).

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    added a note. Your summons will be painful to touch but won't be letal to the touch. Basically, that venom will burn and injure your enemies upon touching the summons but will never be enough to kill them.

    Note: Removed bolded part, since those will be techniques for specific summons, not basic abilities shared by all. Thus the restrictions and limitations will be submitted with each technique.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Korra~ View Post
    Resubmitting
    (Hachi torappu) - Bee Trap
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user will have their bees surround the opponent in a tornado by the all the bees spinning in a different direction. Than the Bees will release honey to out their mouth while spinning in their tornado that covers the opponent's body completely in honey completely restricting their movements.
    Note: Must be a Kamizuru member
    Note: Must by taught by ~Korra~

    ~ Approved ~

    (Genjutsu -Hachi no sekai) Illusionary Arts - World of Bees
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will start by doing the Snake than Dragon signs and start inserting their chakra causing the opponent to see the user and everything (like the surrounding, the user, and anything else)slowly break apart into millions of bees making it where all they see is bees everywhere.The bees will than go after them and stinging them causing a strain in a majority of their movement. The restriction is enough to have them stop walking but they can still weaves some even tho their is some difficulty. In reality they are just in the same spot as they were giving the user the chance to attack.
    Note: Usable 2 times
    Note: No Genjutsu the next 2 turns
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Korra~
    Note: Need to wait a turn before using again

    ~ Declined, I said it doesn't deserve to be S-rank. One more chance then DNR it is ~

    New One

    (Shakuton: Sukōchi kabe) - Scorch Release: Scorch Wall
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user will gather their Scorch chakra and generate a wall of scorch that is 8m tall and 5 m wide. The user can than use this wall as protection or send the wall straight at the enemies.
    Note: Must be taught by ~Korra~
    Note: Usable 4 times
    What it looks like(got the idea from avatar )


    ~ Declined, why is it Short-Mid ? Can you form it anywhere ? ~
    Resubmitting

    (Genjutsu -Hachi no sekai) Illusionary Arts - World of Bees
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will start by doing the Snake than Dragon signs and start inserting their chakra causing the opponent to see the user and everything (like the surrounding, the user, and anything else)slowly break apart into millions of bees making it where all they see is bees everywhere.The bees will than go after them and stinging them causing a strain in a majority of their movement. The restriction is enough to have them stop walking but they can still weaves some hand seals even though there is some difficulty. In reality they are just in the same spot as they were giving the user the chance to attack.
    Note: Usable 4 times
    Note: No Genjutsu the next 2 turns
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Korra~
    Note: Need to wait a turn before using again

    Made it B rank since I think it shouldnt even be A rank

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    Supplementary Jutsu don't cause damage. Also, if it blocks your usage of Genjutsu for 2 full turns, the "need to wait a turn before using again" doesn't make much sense does it?

    New Kamizuru jutsus

    (Hachi no kaori) - Scent of Bees
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will do the Ram sign and start emitting a scent from their body or gourd that bees are attracted to. This will make bees in the area to come towards the user and allow the user to use them for battle. Once a bee is attracted by the scent they will stay under the user control for the rest of the battle.
    Note: Must be taught by ~Korra~
    Note: Usable 5 times a battle.
    Note: Must be part of the Kamizuru clan

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    ±± Declined ±±
    use proper chakra info. Also, will you just say that you suddenly got bees? What if there are no bees in the battle field? In theory you are the one who'll bring bees into the battle field. I don't like the idea of "I use this technique and suddenly i have an army of bees from nowhere to fight with me". Think in terms of the RP how this will work.

    (Bī· bijon) - Bee Vision
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will do the snake sign and channel their chakra into the bees. This will allow the user and the bees vision to be connected. The user can either have their vision connected to either their swarm of bees or a giant bee that they summon but can not have it connected to both.
    Note: Must be taught by ~Korra~
    Note: Usable 5 times a battle
    Note: Once activated the connected vision remains for 5 turns.
    Note: Must be part of the Kamizuru clan
    Feel free to edit ^__^

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    Don't resubmit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Gejutsu: Kōgaku Soshi | Illusionary Arts: Optical Element
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: After performing the Monkey hand seal the user will induce chakra into the opponent brain and place them in a genjutsu. In the genjutsu the opponent sees the user attacking using multiple elements at once, just like using Ying-Yang. For example, if you use a fire jutsu, in the Genjutsu you can add another element to it simultaineously, or cover it in a thin layer of earth, appearing as if Ying-Yang is being used. The genjutsu lasts two turns and can be applied to any of the users jutsu within those turns. While ever the constant chakra flow is being maintained the jutsu wouldn't drop below A rank if hit by an attack that wouldn't stop it.

    Restrictions
    - Can only be taught by Kryptiic
    - The Genjutsu lasts for two turns unless broken
    - Can only be used twice per match
    - No Genjutsu while this is active

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    Why is this A-Rank? Remove the bolded parts.

    Katon: Honō no Wa | Fire Style: Flame Wheel
    Type: Offense | Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30 [+10 for each turn maintained]
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user jumps into the air while doing a front flip. As they flip, they will exhale a stream of fire from their mouths that completely covers them in a wheel of fire that is constantly spinning. The jutsu can be used for transportation and offense. The user can travel for as long as they want by constantly exhaling fire. As fire is constantly being exhaled the fire will get bigger, reaching up to mid range. It would take roughly three seconds for the fire to extend up to mid range.

    Restrictions
    - Can only be taught by Kryptiic
    - Can only be used three times per battle.
    - No fire jutsu above S rank in the same turn.
    - No other jutsu can be used while maintaining the constant flow.

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    Adding to much to this one. Also, won't you just burn to crisp? In your description you aren't protecting yourself. Also, mid range? Why? You want to transform youself in a gigantic ball of fire? Nope.

     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 08-17-2012 at 05:53 PM.

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