Page 63 of 155 « First ... 135359606162636465666773113 ... Last»
Results 1,551 to 1,575 of 3866
  1. #1551
    Banned
    Status
    Erzo is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Jul 2011
    Location
    On Dawan's goat.
    Posts
    14,475
    Post Thanks / Like
    Too many FTs.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Erzo View Post
    Link to approval of this contract.

    (Olm no Jutsu: X No Keisei )- Olm Technique: X Formation
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user stomps/slams his hand down onto the ground, releasing his chakra into the ground and summoning 4 Olms all with lightning infused around their body to come spinning out of the ground, all at an angle, sort of surrounding the opponent before they all suddenly meet at the centre, piercing the opponent as they do so. The Olms come out of the ground, 1 meter around the opponent and in a X formation, with two to the opponents right and left (front side) and the other to the areas to his right and left but behind him, easily piercing the opponent due to the lightning focused around their body. Should the opponent be covered in water, the damage would be even more severe. The Olms are all 10cm long and so make little to no vibration when coming out of the ground, however, the opponent would be able to see those that come out from in beside him.
    Note: No other Olm Arts in same turn.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.

    -Declined-
    Change the distance to 3 metres
    Resubmitting, though, I added something.

    Link to approval of contract.

    (Olm no Jutsu: X No Keisei )- Olm Technique: X Formation
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user stomps/slams his hand down onto the ground, releasing his chakra into the ground and summoning 4 Olms all with lightning infused around their body to come spinning out of the ground, all at an angle, sort of surrounding the opponent before they all suddenly meet at the centre, piercing the opponent as they do so. The Olms come out of the ground, 3 meters around the opponent and in a X formation, with two to the opponents right and left (front side) and the other to the areas to his right and left but behind him, easily piercing the opponent due to the lightning focused around their body. If summoned 3 meters around the opponent, the Olms can reach a maximum height of 6 meters, should the opponent be airborne. The user can also decide to summon them 5 meters away/around the opponent so they can reach a higher height of between 6-10 meters. In addition, should the opponent be covered in water, the damage would be even more severe. The Olms are all 10cm long and so make little to no vibration when coming out of the ground, however, the opponent would be able to see those that come out from in beside him.
    Note: No other Olm Arts in same turn.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.

    X-Pending-X I dont really mind this. Leaving for another mod.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    How can you summon your olms inside solid earth?
    _______________________

    Dropping this:

    Quote Originally Posted by Erzo View Post

    Hansou Katana:- (The Transporting blade)
    Rank:S
    Type: Weapon/ Supplementary
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Range:Short
    Descrition: The ‘Transport blade’ is a blade which has a unique ability of being able to create a perfect clone of itself in the users other hand (depending on which hand he is holding it on) at any time the user requires her too. This enables the user to switch from a one sword fighting style to a dual sword fighting style and can also be used perform a surprise attack on his opponents.
    Note: Can only be wielded by Erzo and those he allows.
    Note: Creating a clone of the blade counts as one of the users move.
    Note: Creating a clone the of blade can only be used 4 times.

    Took out
    ''Another abiltiy the blade has is to be transported from one hand to the other at extremely fast pace this means, the wielder can transport the blade whilst it’s moving, giving it the same momentum when it's is transported on to the other hand, making it harder to dodge attacks, however when this is done, the blade transports from one hand to the other instead of just cloning itself to give the user 2 katanas.''

    ±± Approved ±±
    For this:

    Hōfuku: Retribution
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Range: Short
    Descrition: is a Katana forged in ancient times by a man who had specialized in the Earth element. After his death, the Katana was buried within the ground before being found due to erosion of the land. The Katana itself has the ability to enhance the strength of certain Earth jutsus. For example, whilst having contact with the Katana, the user can use a mud related Earth jutsu and the Katana would be able to supply more chakra to the user giving him the ability to increase the rank of that mud related jutsu, making it more viscous and thick and due to the addition of chakra form the Katana, that jutsu would be able to increase the users mud related jutsu by one rank. Whilst being able to do that, the Katana also has two abilities of its own, these abilities allow it to change it's direction. For example, whilst the tip of the sword is facing forwards, the user can command the sword to suddenly change it's angle and turn to 90 degrees from the centre of the Katana leaving the hilt and the bottom piece of the Katana unaffected, whilst the top tip of the Katana would now be facing to either the users left or right. It also has the ability to extend half a meter forward, as if the user had performed a quick yet powerful thrust with the Katana itself. In addition to that, the blade itself is indestructible (doesn't mean it can destroy anything and everything.) The Katana is roughly smaller than the length of Zabuza's SSOTM Sword, whilst being considerably thinner.
    Note: The increase (by one rank) to mud related jutsus can only be used twice.
    Note: The changing angles (by 90 degree) can only be used twice.
    Note: The ability to extend half a meter (as a quick thrust) can only be used once.
    Note: Each of the abilities count towards one of the users 3 jutsu per move.
    Example of blade turning angles, 2:45 - 2:47


    X-Declined-X No element boosting swords.
    ________________________

    New submission:

    (Raiton/Kenjutsu: Inperiaru Sutoraiku)- Lightning/Sword Arts: Imperial Strike
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user swings his Katana in any manner (horizontally, vertically or diagonally) and releases a seemingly thin line of lightning chakra, which seems to be a simple blade which heads towards the opponent, however, upon the users will and with the addition of chakra, the simple blade suddenly extends multiple other thin yet extremely sharp and lethal blades of lightning which bolt towards the opponent, hitting him/her from multiple angles, easily being able to hit the opponents front and both sides, making this a perfect surprise attack.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.
    Note: No Lightning higher than S-rank, next turn or same turn.

    X-Approved-X
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 09-29-2012 at 07:01 PM.

  2. #1552
    Kato.'s Avatar
    Status
    Kato. is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Dec 2011
    Location
    England
    Posts
    6,780
    Post Thanks / Like
    Yesterday is history, tomorrow
    is a mystery and today is a
    gift. Thats why they call it
    the present
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Dropping current CW if approved:
    Quote Originally Posted by Kato. View Post
    New Custom Weapon


    (Kougake Shippuu) Hurricane Gauntlets
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Damage: 80
    Chakra: 40 (for abilities)
    Description: The hurricane gauntlets are two gauntlets that cover the users whole forearm.
    They have two abilities, the first is the ability to release wind chakra in the form of hurricanes around the users forearms.
    the second is the abilitly to transform into two swords which can be strengethened by having the user channel wind chakra through the swords making them sharper and stronger.
    The two abilitys are activated in different ways. To activate the hurricanes around the users forearms the user simply has to pump wind chakra through the gauntlets and the gauntlets will make the wind into a violent hurricane around the forearm.
    But to activate the twin sword ability the user performs the tiger handseal and applies chakra, this causes the gauntlets to turn into two swords bound to the users forearms but a chain at the end of the swords hilt.
    When using the hurricane ability of the gauntlets the user can fire the hurricanes that have been created at the opponent up to mid range away (the hurricanes are A Rank).
    One of the main uses of the hurricane ability for the gauntlets is for more powerful close combat fighting.

    The hurricane gauntlets, when active can block projectile/stream type lightning jutsu up to A rank and B/A rank water projectiles, aswell as basic ninja tools by the user pointing his arms towards the jutsu/projectile and applying more chakra to the gauntlets, causing the hurricanes to increase in size and strength. (this is with the hurricane ability) This will cause projectile/stream type lightning jutsu's to be canceled out due to the wind hurricanes and water projectiles will either be blown back towards the opponent or will be re-directed.

    - Cannot perform any wind jutsu whilst the Hurricane Gauntlets are activated
    - Cannot perform jutsu that requires handseals whilst the twin swords ability is active
    - The user can alternate the abilities ie. have a sword active in one hand and the hurricane active in the other
    - The hurricanes that are fired are A rank
    - The hurricanes can only be fired 4 times
    - Firing the hurricanes counts towards the users 3 moves
    - Can block up to A rank projectile/stream type lightning jutsu, B/A rank water projectiles and basic ninja tools up to 4 times.
    - Blocking counts as a move from the 3 per turn.
    - Can only be used by Kato Rokuemon

    Approved post
    (Capala) Swift Lightning
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short
    Rank: S
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description:

    Swift Lightning is a long black katana, forged by excellent blacksmiths many years ago.
    When Raiton chakra is channelled into Swift Lightning it becomes much easier to swing by the user, but remains the same weight, meaning the speed of the katana increases but the damage it causes remains the same. Another ability of Swift Lightning is being able to slice through up to S-Rank Doton jutsu as well as being able to slice through up to A-Rank Katon jutsu.

    -No S-Rank jutsu can be used the same turn as Swift Lightning is drawn
    -Can only be wielded by Kato.

    X-Declined-X Similar to existing weapons



    (Fuuton: Buki Kurie-shon) Wind Release: Weapon Creation
    Type: Supplementary/Offence/Defence
    Range: Short-Long
    Rank: C-A
    Chakra: 15-30
    Damage: 30-60
    Description: The user will gather their wind chakra and manipulate it into a weapon of their choice, the rank of the weapon depends on the weapon creates and so is the range.

    Can only be taught by Kato.

    X-Declined-X Long range? Might as well be a dagger behind your opponents head. And similarity to greater wind manipulation.


    (Fuuton: Kuuhaku Senmetsu) Wind Release: Vacuum Annihilation
    Type: Offence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description:The user will gater their wind chakra to the core of their body Once done they will do 2 handseals and Release the stored up wind chakra in their body In an explosion type fashion..... But unlike normal explosions where itt pushes things away... This Wind explosion sucks things into. Once the opponent gets into the Wind explosion they get massive cuts to their bodys.. Not enough to kill but severely injuring them causing them to not be able to do B rank or above jutsus due to the heavy damage. The Explosion is up to mid range but it can sucks things into it up to Long range

    -Usable 3x per battle
    -Can only be taught by Kato.


    X-Declined-X too similar to vacuum pressure
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 09-29-2012 at 11:02 AM.

  3. #1553
    Senior Member Aízen's Avatar
    Status
    Aízen is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Oct 2011
    Posts
    12,190
    Post Thanks / Like
    TrollKing
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Doton: koumorigasa)- Earth release: umbrella
    Type: Supplementary, defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user channels his doton chakra to his hand creates a umbrella made out of earth. The umbrella is packed with chakra and is impact absorbent, high in density and at the same time light. The user can increase its size to increase its range of defense. The main reason of this technique is to defend against rain element. The umbrella's structures can dissipate the force of rain rendering the technique less effective.
    Note: Usable only four times a battle
    Note: No rain techniques while this is active
    Note: No earth S-rank and above in turn

    X-Declined-X Add that it cant defend against A rank Rain techniques since rain is an advanced element it still gets an upper hand.


    (Taboui Suna no jutsu)- Greatest Sand technique
    Type: Offense, Defense, Supplementary
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user focuses his chakra, using it to create strong and large scale sand structures, Pillars, spikes, etc to defend, attack or support him.
    Note: Can only be used 4 times
    Note: Cant use sand afterwards


    X-Declined-X Makes it mid range and add how long it takes to form the structures.
    EDIT: DNR- Pending introduction to the cannon list.
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 09-29-2012 at 07:09 PM.

  4. #1554
    Vayne's Avatar
    Status
    Vayne is offline
    Join Date
    Dec 2011
    Location
    City of Gods
    Posts
    12,717
    Post Thanks / Like
    #Chelsea u-u
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by mangekyo byakugan View Post
    Enigma{Nazo}
    Type: Armor
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Enigma is an armor created in ancient times, it is fathomed to be created by the war god himself Bishamonten. Bishamonten was rumored to have created this armor from materials unknown to human that are only present in the god realm the armor itself was mistakenly transferred to the human realm and is now possessed by humans. The armor being created in the god realm is stronger than most armors. It has two main functions the first is acting like the materiel in bullet proof vests meaning that projectiles that have an aerodynamic shape like a bullet will be stopped while things that are non-aerodynamic like a knife can penetrate it. The Second function of this armor is that it is chakra adaptent meaning that it will take on the characteristic of the last elemental chakra used thus making the opposing weaker element effects lesser and nullified in some cases.
    • It can withstand C rank aerodynamic projectiles for example the kaguya bullets
    • The last elemental chakra the user uses will alter the abilities of the armor meaning that if the last element used was fire the user will have resistance to B rank wind elemental attacks if the fire technique was C rank but the maximum rank that it will be able to resist is A rank of the weaker opposing element. The same applies for the remaining elements.*
    • The armor covers the user's entire body upper and lower, the armor does not obstruct the user's movements at all. The armor is carved to look like it has infinite circles in it, this appearance is always modified when chakra is infused for example when fire chakra is infused it gains a scarlet red color, when water is infused it gains a navy blue color, when wind is infused it gains a mystical silver color, when earth is infused it gains a brownish color, and when lightning is infused it gains a white/blue/yellow color


    Dropping X for this
    Pandemonium {Hyakkiyakou}
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: This sword was forged by a great blacksmith, the blacksmith made this sword from carbon fiber and another unknown element that causes the sword to be indestructible and add that to the carbon present it is extremely light yet very strong. The main ability of this sword and what makes it unique is that several techniques can be used through it and it can negate the effects of some techniques.
    The techniques usable are a wind blast that will be released from the tip of the sword and takes the shape of the sword itself it will be equivalent to C rank and reaches mid range, the other tech that can be used is a slash of wind that will appear when the user slashes the sword it will reach short range and is equivalent to B rank wind.
    The sword can also be used as a lightning negater when wind chakra is infused it will negate C rank lightning techniques as long as they are reasonable for example electro magnetic murder will have a small area of it negated since it is in a wave form.
    • Every tech used is counted toward three jutsu limit


    Summoning Technique: Pikachou {Kunchiyo no Jutsu: Pikachou}
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user after performing the required hand seals will summon pikachou the lightning king of the addax, pickachou unlike most addax has a yellowish color and a bolt like tail pickachou also has a scare as the shape of a lightning bolt on the left side of his body. Pickachou is of size equal to that of Manda. Pickachou is capable of using lightning techs up to the user's rank and is resistant to C rank and below lightning techs. His tail is equipped with an armor that can block B rank and below techniques the summoner can hid behind the tale for protection.
    • Can talk mentally with summoner
    • Can only be summoned once
    • Lasts 4 turns
    • must have signed addax contract

    Contract approval

    -All declined-
    No submission that uses font or formatting alterations such as underline, bold, allignement, color, size, spoilers, etc will be checked.
    Re-submitting without allignment

    Enigma(Nazo)
    Type: Armor
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Enigma is an armor created in ancient times, it is fathomed to be created by the war god himself Bishamonten. Bishamonten was rumored to have created this armor from materials unknown to human that are only present in the god realm the armor itself was mistakenly transferred to the human realm and is now possessed by humans. The armor being created in the god realm is stronger than most armors. It has two main functions the first is acting like the materiel in bullet proof vests meaning that projectiles that have an aerodynamic shape like a bullet will be stopped while things that are non-aerodynamic like a knife can penetrate it. The Second function of this armor is that it is chakra adaptent meaning that it will take on the characteristic of the last elemental chakra used thus making the opposing weaker element effects lesser and nullified in some cases.

    -It can withstand C rank aerodynamic projectiles for example the kaguya bullets
    -The last elemental chakra the user uses will alter the abilities of the armor meaning that if the last element used was fire the user will have resistance to B rank wind elemental attacks if the fire technique was C rank but the maximum rank that it will be able to resist is A rank of the weaker opposing element. The same applies for the remaining elements.
    -The armor covers the user's entire body upper and lower, the armor does not obstruct the user's movements at all. The armor is carved to look like it has infinite circles in it, this appearance is always modified when chakra is infused for example when fire chakra is infused it gains a scarlet red color, when water is infused it gains a navy blue color, when wind is infused it gains a mystical silver color, when earth is infused it gains a brownish color, and when lightning is infused it gains a white/blue/yellow color

    Dropping X for this
    Pandemonium (Hyakkiyakou)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: This sword was forged by a great blacksmith, the blacksmith made this sword from carbon fiber and another unknown element that causes the sword to be indestructible and add that to the carbon present it is extremely light yet very strong. The main ability of this sword and what makes it unique is that several techniques can be used through it and it can negate the effects of some techniques.
    The technique usable is a slash of wind that will appear when the user slashes the sword it will reach short range and is equivalent to B rank wind.
    The sword can also be used as a lightning negater when wind chakra is infused it will negate C rank lightning techniques as long as they are reasonable for example electro magnetic murder will have a small area of it negated since it is in a wave form.

    -Every tech used is counted toward three jutsu limit


    Took out one ability from the sword due to scorps post

    X-Both Pending-X Leaving to another mod

    ______________
    ±± Both Declined ±±
    You can only have one Custom Weapon...you are submitting 2

    Summoning Technique: Pikachou (Kunchiyo no Jutsu: Pikachou)
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user after performing the required hand seals will summon pikachou the lightning king of the addax, pickachou unlike most addax has a yellowish color and a bolt like tail pickachou also has a scare as the shape of a lightning bolt on the left side of his body. Pickachou is of size equal to that of Manda. Pickachou is capable of using lightning techs up to the user's rank and is resistant to C rank and below lightning techs. His tail is equipped with an armor that can block B rank and below techniques the summoner can hid behind the tale for protection.

    -Can talk mentally with summoner
    -Can only be summoned once
    -Lasts 4 turns
    -must have signed addax contract

    Contract approval


    X-Declined-X Cant be the size of manda and make it last 3 turns
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 10-01-2012 at 07:48 PM.

  5. #1555
    McRazor's Avatar
    Status
    McRazor is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Aug 2010
    Posts
    12,718
    Post Thanks / Like
    ‫‫
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Hyouton: Akuma no yōna kōri no meikyū | Ice Release: Demonic Ice Labyrinth
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user takes out a pre-made scroll and channels chakra into it. After that he slams it on the ground and a labyrinth rises all around the battlefield. It's shaped as a circle and its walls are 3m tall and 0.5m thick. It appears to be transparent but the walls can be distinguished after carefully looking at them. The labyrinth forms around the opponent, with him being in the epicenter (look at image for reference). This technique is similar to the Demonic Ice Mirrors. Barney, being a passionate ice user decided to take it to a new level and to give it a bit of his touch. When the labyrinth forms, its radius is equal to the distance between the user and the opponent. As the labyrinth forms in front of him he leaps into the walls and once in there, he can only move through them. On the other hand, the opponent can move only where there is no walls. The labyrinth, having the same properties as the ice mirrors allow him to move very quickly through the labyrinth, around the opponent from where he can freely attack. A huge drawback from this technique is that the user can only use ice jutsus while inside the walls of the labyrinth and while in there, only one per turn. The walls also serve as a resource for other ice techniques. Once formed on the battlefield, it stays, until completely demolished or until the user decides to collapse it with the Ice Release: Collapsing Ice Labyrinth technique.
    Note: Only one jutsu can be used per turn while the user is merged with the labyrinth
    Note: The user can't user ice jutsus 2 complete turns after emerging/destroying the labyrinth
    Note: This jutsu can be performed only once per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this


    ~Declined. Wouldn't the larger version of Ice Labyrinth consume more chakra to make than the smaller one? What prevents opponent from climbing out? I didn't notice you mentioning a roof in the description. Include the answers to these questions when you resubmit, please.~

    Hyouton: Kōri no meikyū o oritatamu | Ice Release: Collapsing Ice Labyrinth
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user, after re-emerging from the labyrinth created using the Ice Release: Demonic Ice Labyrinth technique, can make the ice particles loosen up, which causes the walls to collapse, creating a huge explosion afterwards.
    Note: Usable only after the user leaves the labyrinth walls
    Note: This jutsu can be performed only once per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this

    ~Get the actual technique approved first~

    Hyouton: Aisu renzu | Ice Release: Ice Lens
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: By using 2 handseals the user takes control of air particles above the battlefield and freezes them in order to create a hardly visible lense. By constant use of shape manipulation he can change the shape of the lense, either conclave or convex, depending on his needs. Using that principle he can collect the sunlight and point it into a particular location in order to create a sharp beam, which can be used as a direct or diverse attack.
    Note: The user can use this jutsu 2 times per battle
    Note: Once activated stays above the field 3 turns
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this

    ~Declined. Wouldn't the technique need you to infuse chakra constantly into it to prevent it from beginning to melt? I don't understand why this technique is S - ranked, so go ahead and drop it down at least a notch.~
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 09-29-2012 at 06:39 PM.

  6. #1556
    「 永遠の絶望 」 Blizzàrd's Avatar
    Status
    Blizzàrd is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Sep 2010
    Posts
    13,418
    Post Thanks / Like
    "Death intrigues me, Life
    bores me."
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    [Hyouton: Ningai Ame] Ice Release: Forbidden Rain
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: After performing Tiger hand-seal user releases great amount of water and wind chakra in the sky. The water and wind together creates cold environment at those high altitudes, freezing any precipitation in the air. If a rain jutsu is used when this jutsu is in place, the ice freezes the rain particles rendering the water droplets and their properties useless, turning them into hail or snow at user's will. The hail or snow then falls on the ground piling up creating ideal battle ground for hyouton users.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: Hail or Snow formed from the rain will cover the battlefield in two turns.
    Note: The jutsu lasts for 5 turns, after that returning the weather conditions to normal, no clouds, no freezing temperature.
    Note: No S-rank or above Ice in the following turn.
    Note: Can only be taught by Blizzàrd

    ~Approved even though I don't see a reason for a technique like this.~

    [Hyouton: Kitai Saikoro] Ice Release: Gaseous Denaturing
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: User performs a Tiger hand-seal and expels (water-wind) Ice chakra in a shape of a spherical orb, which grows outwards from the user covering the entire battle field. The Ice chakra is extremely cold, and as it grows outwards is reacts with all gaseous elements present in its range. The elements such as carbon, oxygen, and other gases. The reaction with cold temperatures causes these gasses to lose a lot of heat and kinetic energy rendering their harmful properties useless. If the gas is poisonous it will not have enough energy to react with body or internal fluids to make the poison effective. The cold temperatures basically draws out their energy so that they are unable to harm any living being. The breathing and oxygen intake on the other hand stays calm due to the wind chakra constantly creating wind. After the orb is completely stretched to the long range the area is purified of all impurities.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: Can only denature gaseous poisons/elements.
    Note: No S-ranked Ice in the next turn.
    Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.

    Leaving for someone else

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Don't resubmit. Makes no sense in terms of what Ice Release is or is able to do.

    [Doton: Shou Kadou Yurasu ] Earth Release: Destruction Vortex of Iwa
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (-40 Self-Damage)
    Description: With contact of the earth or inside the earth the user merge his/her chakra with the solid earth or muddy swamp, and channeling the chakra in spinning motion, the vast chakra being strong enough to overcome natural landscape transforms the landscape to spin around user's body. The spinning landscapes sucks everything crushing it into bits as it reaches the center point where the user is spinning, the entire revolving motion creates a humongous earth vortex which has potential of sucking in large Gamabunta sized summons with ease. The vortex expands itself to Long range and as the tendency to envelop entire terrains. The depth of the vortex can be reached to a 100 feet at maximum given enough time for the vortex to expand to long range. Once the jutsu finish, the user, which is at the center is blasted out diagonally due to the pressure several (120) meters in the air, 20 meters above the actual ground level. User suffers enough injuries to not being able to walk/run for 2 turns thus the only resort is to not move from the position where he or she falls back.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: User cannot walk/run for 2 turns.
    Note: No S-rank or above Earth jutsus for the next two turns.
    Note: No jutsu can be used in the same turn after this jutsu has been used.
    Note: Graphical representation; x
    Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.

    ~Declined. The size of this technique is absolutely ridiculous and I am not going to approve a technique that has the potential of sucking in large summmonings like Gamabunta. I am giving you a chance to change the size of the technique and make it less overpowered.~
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 10-01-2012 at 07:49 PM.

  7. #1557
    Tsuna...'s Avatar
    Status
    Tsuna... is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Apr 2012
    Location
    Northern Ireland
    Posts
    17,830
    Post Thanks / Like
    If you have a question just
    ask, I'll do my best to answer
    it
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Raiton: Ginga Ringu) Lightning Release: Galactic Doughnut
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid Range
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    The user concentrates vast amounts of Lightning chakra into his dominant arm, he then releases the chakra around his arm then makes a throwing motion throwing the lightning at high speeds at the opponent, the lighting looks like rope and wraps about them. Then the user closes his hand causing the band to shrink crushing them.

    Notes:
    - Useable once
    - User can't use their dominant arm in the next turn
    - Can only be tracked by those who are the same rank as the user or above.
    - No lightning jutsu above A rank for 2 turns
    - Can only be taught by -Gotenks-

    ~Declined. Chakra cost and damage is wrong for a forbidden ranked technique. Can you explain how the electricity can crush the opponent and not incinerate the opponent immediately when resubmitting?~

    Summoning Animal: (Shimauma) Zebra
    Scroll Owner: -Gotenks-
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: None as of yet
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None as of yet
    Description and Background:
    Description:
    Their stripes come in different patterns, unique to each individual. They are generally social animals that live in small harems to large herds. Unlike their closest relatives, horses and asses, zebras have never been truly domesticated. The unique stripes of zebras make them one of the animals most familiar to people. They occur in a variety of habitats, such as grasslands, savannas, woodlands, thorny scrublands, mountains, and coastal hills.

    Background:
    In the North Western plains of the Land of Fire -Gotenks- ventured in order to sign a summoning contract with the animals known as Zebra. The Zebra were reluctant at first to allow -Gotenks- to be the very first person to sign it because they doubted his abilities. In order to prove him self he was asked to gather special herbs from all over the Land of Fire in order to create a herbal medicine that the Zebra used to cure their injured. The first herb was in the North West of the Land of Fire along the border of Kumogakure. The second herb was at the southern coast of the Land of Fire and the very last herb was right in the centre of the Land of Fire, the dead centre. Once he returned with these herbs it proved to the zebra that he was dedicated and could accomplish anything if he set his mind to it. So they branded him with the zebra tattoo and let him sign the contract in his blood allowing -Gotenks- to summon the zebra whenever he is in battle.

    Tattoo:

    This tattoo must be placed on a person's body if they wish to sign the contract

    Wiki:
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Zebra

    ~Approved the contract even though the story was cheesy.~
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 09-29-2012 at 07:04 PM.

  8. #1558
    Scaze's Avatar
    Status
    Scaze is online now
    Gender
    Join Date
    Apr 2011
    Location
    In ur mum fam
    Posts
    13,889
    Post Thanks / Like
    Boom 4 Scaze C:
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Scaze View Post

    (Doton: Shinku Bohi )- Earth Release: The Scarlet Tombstone
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will release their chakra into the ground, then by manipulating their chakra, they cause a abundance of adhesive sticky mud to burst up from the ground around and beneath the opponent(s), the mass of mud quickly forming into a tombstone like shape while clinging to the target. The mud then quickly hardens, encasing the whole of the opponent in solid rock, the rock quickly continues to constrict around the opponent, growing tighter and tighter until it eventually crushes them with immense force. Multiple tombstones can be created to encase and destroy multiple enemies, or a single large tombstone can be created to destroy a group of enemies, or one large enemy. The Tombstone created can be no larger than Gamakichi and if multiple Tombstones are created, their total size combined cannot exceed that of Gamakichi.

    Note:
    - Can only be taught by Scaze
    - No Earth jutsu above S rank for the same and next turn.

    -Declined-
    Restrictions on the number of usages
    (Doton: Shinku Bohi )- Earth Release: The Scarlet Tombstone
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will release their chakra into the ground, then by manipulating their chakra, they cause a abundance of adhesive sticky mud to burst up from the ground around and beneath the opponent(s), the mass of mud quickly forming into a tombstone like shape while clinging to the target. The mud then quickly hardens, encasing the whole of the opponent in solid rock, the rock quickly continues to constrict around the opponent, growing tighter and tighter until it eventually crushes them with immense force. Multiple tombstones can be created to encase and destroy multiple enemies, or a single large tombstone can be created to destroy a group of enemies, or one large enemy. The Tombstone created can be no larger than Gamakichi and if multiple Tombstones are created, their total size combined cannot exceed that of Gamakichi.

    Note:
    - Can only be taught by Scaze
    - No Earth jutsu above S rank for the same and next turn.
    - Can only be used 3x.

    ~Approved~

    Hyouton bio:http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=225406

    Hyouton: Genwaku Kyokukou | Ice Release : Blinding Aurora
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short - Long.
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user infuses all of his Hyouton techniques with extra chakra, so as to add extreme light reflecting capabilities to the Ice. For the next Four turns all Hyouton techniques used will refract and reflect light in a similar manner to that of a glass prism, causing immensely bright rainbow colours to be emitted from the technique, so as to blind and hinder the opponent. If the hyouton technique is moving at fair speeds then the colours will blend into one, resulting in a bright flash of white light constantly emanating from the Ice until it's completely destroyed. The user, being accustomed to terrains with large amounts of weathered Ice along with bright sunlight is relatively unaffected by the enhanced flashes of light produced by the Ice. However, after the technique ends/when there is no longer any blinding Ice Jutsu in play, due to the light suddenly fading, the users retinas will suffer, causing the user to be blind for the turn that the lightning returns to normal

    Note:
    - Can only be used 3x
    - Lasts for Four Turns
    - Once the duration period ends, the user must wait two turns before re-activating
    - Can only be taught by Scaze

    ~Declined. Incorrect chakra cost and you need to decrease the amount of times you can use this technique and the time it lasts~

    Quote Originally Posted by Scaze View Post
    (Katon: Kaibun hoono) Fire Style: Ash flame
    Rank: D
    Range:Short-Long
    Damage:10
    Chakra:5
    Typeffensive
    Description: The user preforms the snake handseal causing a single spec of ash to appear somewhere in the battle field, the ash can be as small as a eye of a needle or as large as a small marble. Upon clicking their teeth the Ash ignites burning at fairly great tempratures and reaching its maximum temprature only moments after ignition.
    ~The ash spec can be no larger than a marble.
    ~Can only be used once per turn.


    ±± Declined ±± The idea is ok but you are making it so that its too small. Also, the ignition of this ash would be a tiny itsy bitsy burst of fire, not something that can reach fairly great temperatures... You need to work it out a bit more. Also, this is a C-Rank. Btw, awesome idea ^^
    (Katon: Kaibun hoono) Fire Style: Ash flame
    Rank: C
    Range:Short-Long
    Damage:20
    Chakra:10
    Typeffensive
    Description: The user preforms the snake hand-seal causing a single spec of ash to appear somewhere in the battle field, the ash can be as small as a grain of rice, or as large as a volleyball. Upon clicking their teeth the Ash ignites burning at fairly great temperatures and reaching its maximum temperature only moments after ignition, the size of the ash plays a large role in how much offensive capabilities it actually wields.
    ~The sphere of ash can be no larger than a volleyball.
    ~Can only be used once per turn.
    ~Can only be used 4x

    ~Resubmit explaining how you can just cause a volleyball of ash appear somewhere in the battle field. Do you burn something, convert fire chakra into ash or gather ash from the surroundings?~
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 09-29-2012 at 07:37 PM.

  9. #1559
    Thunderbolt's Avatar
    Status
    Thunderbolt is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Sep 2011
    Location
    Abuja
    Posts
    8,101
    Post Thanks / Like
    Diamond In The Dirt.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Kaze to daichi no sutairu: Mippei chissoku.) Wind and Earth style: enclosed suffocation
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90[Death to the User]
    Description:The user when in short range or mid range from his opponent, channels doton chakra across his body, he then focuses his chakra on his palms and slams it to the ground creating a huge dense wall of earth which encloses and traps himself and his opponent, the wall is strong and tightly sealed and closed thus the amount of oxygen is limited. The user then takes a breath in and suctions up the air which is already minimized in the enclosed space into his mouth up to the point where there is little or no oxygen left for either the user or the opponent to breath and have complete consciousness .

    Note: Can only be done once in a battle.

    Note: Can not use any s rank wind and earth pre the jutsu is used

    ~Declined. How can you suction the air from the closed space if you're mid range from the opponent? Also, did you really mean that you kill yourself by using the technique or was this just a typo? Poorly restricted for a forbidden ranked technique and the second technique doesn't make sense at all.~

    Quote Originally Posted by Thunderbolt View Post


    (Kesshō no hontai)A body of crystalline

    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/defensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:The user performs the ram and tiger hand seals and then channel her crystalline chakra across her body from her head to her feet. She then creates a strong and dense form of crystalline which covers her body from head to toe and which is invulnerable and immune to a rank jutsu and below, howwever would be shattered and completely broken with direct contact with jutsu s rank and above, when in this form the user can merge himself in the ground and travel towards the opponent location quite fast catching the opponent unarmed or off guard, the user can also fire little crystalline spears [c rank] towards the opponent.

    ~Declined~ No merging with the ground.
    [/B]
    (Kesshō no hontai)A body of crystalline
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/defensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:The user performs the ram and tiger hand seals and then channel her crystalline chakra across her body from her head to her feet. She then creates a strong and dense form of crystalline which covers her body from head to toe and which is invulnerable and immune to a rank jutsu and below, howwever would be shattered and completely broken with direct contact with jutsu s rank and above, the user can also fire little crystalline spears [c rank] towards the opponent.

    Note:Can only be done once a battle
    Note: Last for only two turns
    Note: No S rank and above crystall jutsu for the next two turns.
    Note:Must be sanin to use .

    ~Declined. No technique can be immune to A - rank and below unless it's a self repairing technique which your technique isn't. Fix that part from your technique and state that techniques below A - rank can damage the body too.

    Tsume:Claw
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The claw unlike any other swords in existence, is unique and has it own special traits and abilities, It was said to have been forged by the best black smith in konohagakure and is embedded and forged with titanium, making the sword indestructible. The sword was given the name ‘Claw’ due to its razor sharp and cutting strengths and powers, if not wielded in the right hands the sword can be destructive to the user rather than the opponent. The sword can cut and deflect basic elemental attacks and ninjutsu up to A rank, negating the jutsu . The sword can only be wielded by the user and if tried to be wield by anyone except the user , the weight would increase by a ton ,stopping the user from lifting the sword up or wielding it. The wielder of the sword shares a special bond and connection with the sword, as the user shares similar chakra traits with the sword, so genjutsu which disrupt the chakra flow in the body are easily realized and dispelled by the user. The sword however is not all good and drains the user life force over the three turns thus leaving the user quite fatigued after the three turns.

    Note: Can only be done once a battle
    Note: Last for three turns
    Note: No S rank or forbidden for one turn after the sword is deactivated
    Note: Cutting and deflecting jutsu count as a move .

    ~Declined, do not resubmit.~
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 09-29-2012 at 08:10 PM.

  10. #1560
    Ryūjin's Avatar
    Status
    Ryūjin is online now
    Gender
    Join Date
    Sep 2010
    Location
    In an alternate dimension!
    Posts
    21,229
    Post Thanks / Like
    Engaged. Saraisthebest!!
    #henrikisevil
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Suiton: Myōchikara) - Water Release: Life Force
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This is an advanced usage of the water chakra, by gathering water chakra throughout the whole body of the user, creating surges of water chakra within the user's body, with careful chakra manipulation the user infuses all of his cells with water chakra, using the life force feature of the water chakra to wash out the poison in the user's blood, dispelling harmful effects made by poisonous gases, and refreshes the user's cells making them poison free, the user can use this technique to decrease his body temperature as well by channeling water chakra in the place where there's hot temperature, using the water chakra to cool the user's body down, however the user cannot use each usages of this technique at the same time, only one usage at a time, this technique can only be used three times per battle due to the accurate chakra manipulation within the user's body, and cannot use S-rank water techniques and above in the same turn that this technique is used in.

    ~Declined, do not resubmit. Your technique steps into the boundaries of medschool.~
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 09-29-2012 at 08:11 PM.

  11. #1561
    Loki's Avatar
    Status
    Loki is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Oct 2011
    Location
    Limelight
    Posts
    13,056
    Post Thanks / Like
    Ours is the Fury
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    -Resubmitting Again
    Quote Originally Posted by Kurotsuchi.. View Post
    (Meiton: Kirudesuto)- Dark Release: Hungry Dragon
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Mid-Long Range
    Chakra: 30 Chakra
    Damage: 60 Damage
    Description:
    The user gathers Dark chakra in both hands and brings them together, he then releases a Dragon composed of Dark chakra with help of shape manipulation, from his left hand, the dragon if clashed against a B rank or lower Fire or lightning based technique it will "eat" the technique meaning it absorbs it and will simply grow bigger, faster and stronger, however the user must keep the dragons tail attached to there hand, meaning if he stops the chakra channeling the dragon will simply dissapear. It has enough strength to smash an opponent to the ground and break a few bones.
    - Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    - Must wait 1 turns before using again.
    - Must be a Dark user.
    - Can only be taught by Mihawk.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    You'll need to absorb something first to perform this.
    Quote Originally Posted by Kurotsuchi.. View Post

    Resubmitting~

    With the changes you pointed out, also made it S rank, and changed chakra & damage, aswell as decreased number of useage, and interval before using again.

    (Meiton: Kirudesuto)- Dark Release: Hungry Dragon
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Mid-Long Range
    Chakra: 40 Chakra
    Damage: 80 Damage
    Description:
    After having user convert the absorbed chakra from the Dark Release: Inhailing Maw from an A or lowered ranked Lightning/Fire technique or S rank and lower raw chakra , then releases a Dragon composed of Dark chakra with help of shape manipulation, from his left hand, the dragon if clashed against a B rank or lower Fire or lightning based technique it will "eat" the technique meaning it absorbs it and will simply grow bigger, faster and stronger, however the user must keep the dragons tail attached to there left hand, meaning if he stops the chakra channeling the dragon will simply dissapear. It has enough strength to smash an opponent to the ground and break a few bones and whatnot.
    - Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    - Must wait 3 turns before using again.
    - Must be a Dark user.
    - Can only be taught by Kurotsuchi..

    -Declined-
    Keep it as it was, an A-rank. Also define how stronger the dragon gets when it absorbs other techniques.
    Changed it back to A rank and explained how stronger it gets when it absorbs other techniqes.
    (Meiton: Kirudesuto)- Dark Release: Hungry Dragon
    Type: Offensive/Attack
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Mid-Long Range
    Chakra: 30 Chakra
    Damage: 60 Damage
    Description:
    After having user convert the absorbed chakra from the Dark Release: Inhailing Maw from an A or lowered ranked Lightning/Fire technique or S rank and lower raw chakra, then releases a Dragon composed of Dark chakra with help of shape manipulation, from his left hand, the dragon if clashed against a B rank or lower Fire or lightning based technique it will "eat" the technique meaning it absorbs it and will simply grow bigger, faster and stronger meaning it becomes an S rank technique, however the user must keep the dragons tail attached to there left hand, meaning if he stops the chakra channeling the dragon will simply dissapear. It has enough strength to smash an opponent to the ground and break a few bones and whatnot.
    - Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    - Must wait 3 turns before using again.
    - Must be a Dark user.
    - Can only be taught by Kurotsuchi..

    ~Approved.~

    (Fuuton: Uindo Kuruma) - Wind Release: Wind Wheel
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: B rank
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 20 Chakra
    Damage: 40 Damage
    Description:
    The user releases a certain amount of wind through there mouth wich then is rapidly spun around the user and carries the person as inside a wheel. It is highly sharp on the outside, able to cut through solid objects such as C rank and lower earth techniques and slice through human flash with little to no trouble at all. Most comonly used for traveling.
    - Can only be used by Kurotsuchi.

    ~Declined. You made this sound like a mode, so restrict the time you can use this technique move~

    Summoning Animal: Dracos
    Scroll Owner: Kurotsuchi..
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: To be Created.
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: To be Created.
    - Dracos Wikipedia Info Source.
    - Permission from Riku.. to submitt a sub-species of Lizards.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    at request of the user
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 09-29-2012 at 08:35 PM.

  12. #1562
    Lili-Chwan's Avatar
    Status
    Lili-Chwan is online now
    Gender
    Join Date
    Jun 2009
    Location
    Behind you, with a knife...or not
    Posts
    15,461
    Post Thanks / Like
    Now this user has a status
    albeit its a lame one!
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Lili-Chwan View Post
    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Dokueki) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Agwe's Venom

    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Allows the user to summon a mist composed of thousands of nano-sized box jellyfishes. The mist moves concisely as a whole. Due to their small size, they don't require a large amount of water as per se, rather each individual is able to survive inside very small water sources, which would enable them to survive, for example, inside the droplets of the mist or inside the human body. Using their powerful venom, they infect the body and eat away the flesh, causing great pain throughout the process. Since they're minimal they are unable to preform jutsus of any kind. As they're summoned they bring forth a water mist, distinguishable from the regular mist by the naked eye only because of an soft and discrete unnatural glow on the droplets of the mist, as if it it alive, unless they're summoned directly into water, thus keeping the glow but summoning no additional water.[/COLOR]
    *It is possible to be infected and not feel severe effects, rather just pain from the venom, if the boxes are blocked early on*
    *Can only be used once*
    *Can't be summoned directly on the opponent*
    *Last 4 turns in the battlefield, take care of an average adult within a turn*

    -Declined-
    Define the size of the water sources where they can be summoned in. By just saying water you could pretty much summon them in the rain. Also, change the last restriction to at least 2 turns.


    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Taitou Oubochi ) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Baron Cimitiére's Accession

    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user performs a couple of handseals, summoning a giant jellyfish underground. The jellyfish possesses several dozens of tentacles, instead of 4. After being summoned, Baron Cimitiére rises them above ground, bursting forth with great power and strength, similar to the final dance of the Kaguya. In it's initial accession, it is capable of piercing through most metals crystals and other substances up to it's rank, and the strongest (Diamond. Tungsten) one rank lower. Afterwards, it can wrap around his opponents to crush them and poison them with it's venom.
    *Can stay in the battlefield for 3 turns*
    *Can only be summoned twice, if he didn't sustain critical damage*
    *Requires one turn in between usage*
    *The user must be on the ground or less than 10 meters from it to summon Cemitiére*

    -Declined-
    Overpowered


    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Ou ) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Maman Brigitte

    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 80
    Damage Point: N/A
    Description: The user preforms one handseal, summoning Maman Brigitte. She comes forth covering the whole battlefield with a thick mist, throwing off chakra sensing techniques. The mist carries a strong genjutsu, as it is filled with both Maman and the summoner's chakra, making the opponent hear obscenities coming from a female voice, without being able to detect it's origin. Anyone trapped within the mist is flooded with images of black roosters, dead spirits and a burning taste and smell of rum and red peppers, all rounded and perverted by Maman's voice as if mocking them and the ones they lost. Maman herself is a great box jellyfish the size of a human, light enough to swim through the mist, taking advantage of the confusion of her opponent to strike him from behind. This takes the concept of a living Genjutsu, of a mist, a summon and, genjutsu mixing together. The genjutsu constantly shifts it's chakra signal, making it so that it adapts to any shifts in the opponent's chakra flow, making this a constant genjutsu even if the opponent is able to constantly shift his chakra or body, as long as the opponent is in the mist.
    *The thick mist can't be broken or pushed away by anything lower than it's rank*
    *The mist throws off Natural Chakra gathering, preventing Sage Mode Users from gathering enough to break the Genjutsu*
    *Can only be used once*
    *Lasts 4 turns*

    -Declined-
    Oped. If you want the bolded part, reduce the range of the mist (which I guess it's up to long-range). Also, edit your first note/restriction to something more reasonable. A b-rank wind technique could blow a bigger area than some S-rank techniques, depending on what the jutsu specifically does, meaning rank doesn't mind here, but the strength/size of the wind able to blow it away.
    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Dokueki) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Agwe's Venom

    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Allows the user to summon a mist composed of thousands of nano-sized box jellyfishes. The mist moves concisely as a whole. Due to their small size, they don't require a large amount of water as per se, rather each individual is able to survive inside very small water sources, which would enable them to survive, for example, inside the droplets of the mist or inside the human body. Using their powerful venom, they infect the body and eat away the flesh, causing great pain throughout the process. Since they're minimal they are unable to preform jutsus of any kind. As they're summoned they bring forth a water mist, distinguishable from the regular mist by the naked eye only because of an soft and discrete unnatural glow on the droplets of the mist, as if it it alive, unless they're summoned directly into water, thus keeping the glow but summoning no additional water.
    *It is possible to be infected and not feel severe effects, rather just pain from the venom, if the boxes are blocked early on*
    *Can only be used once*
    *Can't be summoned directly on the opponent. The combined amount of boxes is about 1 cubic meter*
    *If summoned on rain, they'll fall to puddles, and are unable to move out of the puddle unless they find adjacent water pathways*
    *Last 2 turns in the battlefield, take care of an average adult within a turn*

    ~Declined. Your jellyfishes cannot be nano-sized and therefore only visible to doujutsu users.~

    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Taitou Oubochi ) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Baron Cimitiére's Accession

    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user performs a couple of handseals, summoning a giant jellyfish underground. The jellyfish possesses several dozens of tentacles, instead of 4. After being summoned, Baron Cimitiére rises them above ground, bursting forth with great power and strength, similar to the final dance of the Kaguya, having the same power as it. Afterwards, it can wrap around his opponents to crush them and poison them with it's venom.
    *Can stay in the battlefield for 3 turns*
    *Can only be summoned twice, if he didn't sustain critical damage*
    *Requires one turn in between usage*
    *The user must be on the ground or less than 10 meters from it to summon Cemitiére*

    ~Declined. The crushing part I understand but not the bursting forth with the power of Dance of the Seedling Fern technique I don't. How can a jellyfish that lacks high amounts of mass do so much damage?~

    ( Koukurage Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Ou ) Box Jellyfish Summoning Jutsu: Maman Brigitte

    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 80
    Damage Point: N/A
    Description: The user preforms one handseal, summoning Maman Brigitte. She comes forth covering the whole battlefield with a thick mist, throwing off chakra sensing techniques. The mist carries a strong genjutsu, as it is filled with both Maman and the summoner's chakra, making the opponent hear obscenities coming from a female voice, without being able to detect it's origin. Anyone trapped within the mist is flooded with images of black roosters, dead spirits and a burning taste and smell of rum and red peppers, all rounded and perverted by Maman's voice as if mocking them and the ones they lost. Maman herself is a great box jellyfish the size of a human, light enough to swim through the mist, taking advantage of the confusion of her opponent to strike him from behind. This takes the concept of a living Genjutsu, of a mist, a summon and, genjutsu mixing together. The genjutsu constantly shifts it's chakra signal, making it so that it adapts to any shifts in the opponent's chakra flow, making this a constant genjutsu even if the opponent is able to constantly shift his chakra or body, as long as the opponent is in the mist, mid range from Maman
    *The thick mist can't be broken or pushed away by anything lower than one rank bellow it's rank, this is because of the consistency of the mist, battling against the power of the wind/scattering agent*
    *The mist throws off Natural Chakra gathering, preventing Sage Mode Users from gathering enough to break the Genjutsu*
    *Can only be used once*
    *Lasts 4 turns*
    *The genjutsu strikes mid-range from Maman Brigitte, despite the mist covering up to long range*

    Note: Added a note explaining the resistance, but lowered the rank nonetheless (Not B rank, as you said, or it would be really easy to break the jutsu).

    ~Declined. Is the chakra cost faulty or does this consist two S - ranked techniques? Please clear that up when resubmitting the technique~
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 09-30-2012 at 07:52 PM.

  13. #1563
    Selendrile's Avatar
    Status
    Selendrile is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Jun 2011
    Location
    Dragon's Den
    Posts
    16,751
    Post Thanks / Like
    I ask not for lighter burdens,
    but for broader shoulders.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Rahl-san View Post
    (Futon: Aiorosu no Nemui Akubi)- Wind Release: Aeolus's Sleepy Yawn
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will perform two hand seals, Dragon → Horse, and then focus his wind chakra onto any spot on the battlefield. The user will form a flat circle shape, with a powerful, spiraling suction force like a vacuum. The suction has the ability to pull objects with great speeds towards it, sending it through the circle shredded and sliced due to the natural cutting properties of wind. The wind circle will release the object backwards in an uncontrollable spiraling manner, similar to how it draws the object in.
    Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile
    Note: Usable three times per battle
    Note: No wind techniques in the same turn

    -Declined-
    Reduce range to mid. Define the size os the circle and what it can drag inside, including their size.
    (Futon: Aiorosu no Nemui Akubi)- Wind Release: Aeolus's Sleepy Yawn
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will perform two hand seals, Dragon → Horse, and then focus his wind chakra onto any spot on the battlefield. The user will form a flat circle shape, with a diameter of four meters. The circle has a powerful, spiraling suction force like a vacuum. The suction has the ability to pull objects or tangible techniques (such as water/earth) with great speeds towards it, sending it through the circle shredded and sliced due to the natural cutting properties of wind. The object at maximum size must be the same size of the wind circle or smaller in order to draw it in. The wind circle will release the object backwards in an uncontrollable spiraling manner, similar to how it draws the object in.
    Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile
    Note: Usable three times per battle
    Note: No wind techniques in the same turn

    ~Declined. Define how long it takes for an object to be released from the circle.~
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 09-29-2012 at 10:21 PM.

  14. #1564
    W Ø Я S T B Ξ H Δ V I O R Drizzy's Avatar
    Status
    Drizzy is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Apr 2011
    Location
    Dressrosa
    Posts
    13,283
    Post Thanks / Like
    design ● creativity ● art
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Drizzeh View Post
    Resubmitting with the changes you pointed out, I didn't change the Rank though if that's alright.


    [Suiton: Fuka Yari]Water Release: Shark Arrows
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: "Suiton: Fuka Yari" is a water based technique in which the user produces a source of water on both palms, they will then proceed to continuously launch small arrows/spike shaped figures . This technique is performed by channeling chakra to the palms and creating water from it, upon launching the water in small portions, the user will focus on shape manipulation and chakra manipulation to make them as sharp and destructive as possible. Gif #1 shows the movements made to release the water arrows, Gif #2 shows an example of the technique's speed.
    Note Usable only twice per battle.
    Note: A maximum of 35 arrows can be released per use.


    -Approved-

    Just note that each of those 35 bullets obviously won't have the strength of an A-rank


    NEW

    [Kuchiyuse no Jutsu; Kin-Gin Gama] Summoning; Gold and Silver Toads
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user, with a little of his blood on hand performs the Boar, Dog, Bird, Monkey, Ram handseals then clasps his hands. This calls upon the Gold and Silver Toads of Myobokuzan. They are two male toads, both the size of Fukasaku/Shima. They appear on the user's shoulders, channeling chakra to their feet so that they don't easily fall off, however, they can also leap off for various purposes. The appearance of the toads match with their names, Gamakin: The Toad of Gold is a golden colored Toad in a black coat and a golden circle on the cloak (the back). Gamagin: The Toad of Silver is a silver colored toad also wearing a black cloak, however, the circle on the cloak is silver. The Gamakin can perform Fire Techniques not requiring handseals up to Rank A, while Gamagin can perform Wind techniques up to A Rank. These Toads specialize in Wind and Fire combinations. Gamakin has greater physical strength than Gamagin, while Gamagin has greater speed.
    Note: Must have signed the Toad Contract.
    Note: Sage Mode is not required to be able to summon them.
    Note: They stay on the battlefield for only 4 turns before returning to Myobokuzan.
    Note: All techniques used by the Toads counts towards the user's 3 jutsu per turn limit.

    -Declined-
    Define their strength and speed, since you mentioned them and change the 4 turns in battle to 3



    [Doton: Shou Tsuchi Bakuhatsu] Earth Release: Destructive Earth Eruption
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user performs the Boar-►Dog-►Tiger handseals then releases his/her chakra into the earth by placing the palms on the ground or channeling it through the legs. By manipulating the earth with his/her chakra, the user may create a line of pressure within the earth. At the user's will, the earth will begin a violent eruption, causing chunks of rocks to emerge from below. Rising along with the rocks is a great amount of dirt, with this technique, the user can create a horizontal line to defend certain techniques, or direct the eruption towards the opponent.
    Note: Usable only twice per battle.
    Note: No S Rank earth in the same or following turn.


    -Declined-
    This hardly deserves to be an A-rank


    Note to person checking the above CJ (Earth Release: Destructive Earth Eruption). I have done my own research and I have went through the wiki, even though this was done in the Naruto Anime, it's only for the starting (Shippuden Opening 9) of the anime. It's just a dramatic effect and not an actual jutsu.
    Resubmitting these two.

    [Kuchiyuse no Jutsu; Kin-Gin Gama] Summoning; Gold and Silver Toads
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user, with a little of his blood on hand performs the Boar, Dog, Bird, Monkey, Ram handseals then clasps his hands. This calls upon the Gold and Silver Toads of Myobokuzan. They are two male toads, both the size of Fukasaku/Shima. They appear on the user's shoulders, channeling chakra to their feet so that they don't easily fall off, however, they can also leap off for various purposes. The appearance of the toads match with their names, Gamakin: The Toad of Gold is a golden colored Toad in a black coat and a golden circle on the cloak (the back). Gamagin: The Toad of Silver is a silver colored toad also wearing a black cloak, however, the circle on the cloak is silver. Gamakin can perform Fire Techniques not requiring handseals up to Rank A, while Gamagin can perform Wind techniques not requiring handseals up to A Rank. These Toads specialize in Wind and Fire combinations. Gamakin has greater physical strength than Gamagin, but has the speed of a regular small toad. Gamagin is faster than Gamakin, but has the strength of a regular sized toad.Since the Toads are not able to gather/manipulate Senjutsu chakra, the strength and speed respectively, is very limited. While Fukasaku can lift Gamabunta, one of the largest toads, Gamakin can only lift the weight of a small toad such as Gamakichi. Gamakin has the raw speed of a regular S-Class ninja.
    Note: Must have signed the Toad Contract.
    Note: Sage Mode is not required to be able to summon them.
    Note: They stay on the battlefield for only 4 turns before returning to Myobokuzan.
    Note: All techniques used by the Toads counts towards the user's 3 jutsu per turn limit.
    Note: Usable only once per battle.

    ~Approved. Speed chart references won't be tolerated though, so I removed it~

    [Doton: Shou Tsuchi Bakuhatsu] Earth Release: Destructive Earth Eruption
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user performs the Boar-►Dog-►Tiger handseals then releases his/her chakra into the earth by placing the palms on the ground or channeling it through the legs. By manipulating the earth with his/her chakra, the user may create a line of pressure within the earth. At the user's will, the earth will begin a violent eruption, causing chunks of rocks to emerge from below. Rising along with the rocks is a great amount of dirt, with this technique, the user can create a horizontal line to defend certain techniques, or direct the eruption towards the opponent.
    Note: Usable only twice per battle.
    Note: No S Rank earth in the same or following turn.


    ~Approved~
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 10-03-2012 at 10:21 AM.

  15. #1565
    Azazel's Avatar
    Status
    Azazel is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Aug 2010
    Location
    Hawaii
    Posts
    16,975
    Post Thanks / Like
    Change is here.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Katon: Hītoreizā [Fire Style: Heat Raiser]
    Type:Supplementary/Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user performs 2 handseals and channels their fire chakra into a source of heat/fire and drastically increases the temperature of that source, sending a dangerous Heat wave up into the sky. The heat wave causes severe burns on an opponent/summon/target within the range of the heat source.
    Note: Can only be used 3x per battle
    Note: Cannot be input into an opponents jutsu.
    Note: No fire techniques above B rank for one turn.
    Note: No Fire techniques above A Ranked in same turn.

    X-Pending-X Heat waves have been made and the only way to transfer heat or raise temperature is conduction, convection and radiation. So declined on my end you should explain the technique better. But another mod can put his input here.

    ~Declined. I agree with Xylon said, so think of a better way explaining it without stepping into the boundaries of other techniques/abilities~

    Kurōn no Fukushū {Genjutsu Release: Revenge of the Clones}
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user channels their chakra into an opponent and forces them to see multiple illusions of themselves throughout the battlefield. This works especially well when an opponent has one or more clones of themselves on the battlefield causing the genjutsu to effect the clones as well. The opponent will see multiple clones of themselves that are trying to attack him and is paralyzed in fear. If there are clones on the battlefield, instead of them being paralyzed they try to attack their original by throwing a barrage of kunai with explosive tags. The kunai that are thrown take on the image of another clone attacking the original, which makes the image more terrifying. The user takes on the image of the opponent while casting this genjtusu, throwing multiple kunai at the opponent(s). This jutsu can be cast against multiple opponents to make them attack each other with multiple kunai with ex tags instead of being paralyzed in fear.
    Note: If casting against multiple opponents, can only be used once per battle, otherwise can be used 3x per battle.
    Note: No Genjutsu above A Ranked for remainder of battle if this technique has been used 3x.
    Note: No Genjutsu can be used the turn after this technique is used.
    Note: The user must wait 5 turns before using this technique again.

    X-Declined-X In reality its a really simply technique, i dont understand the high rank. Drop it atleast till B-rank.
     
         
    Last edited by Passion; 10-17-2012 at 12:27 PM.

  16. #1566
    black uchiha's Avatar
    Status
    black uchiha is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Oct 2010
    Location
    Over there
    Posts
    8,778
    Post Thanks / Like
    This user has no status.
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Doton: Merīgōraundo) Earth Release: Merry-Go-Round
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user makes a simple change to the battlefield, by sending chakra into the ground, rotating the crust of the earth a full 180 degrees, making the user and the opponent swap places. This happens at high speeds akin to Earth Release: Moving Earth Core, allowing them to avoid attacks; as such it makes the opponent lose their balance.

    - Can only use 4 times per battle
    - No S-rank earth techs in the same move
    - Only whats on the ground is effected
    - Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

    X-Declined-X Make it mid range, switching earth in long range battle feild completely puts your opponent against his own technique. Otherwie define how long the technique extends in metres. lasly, i think i saw this before. Post any previous submitions if there are.

    (Doton: Atorasu no ribenji) Earth Release: Atlas' Revenge
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90 (25 & Restricts users Doton to zero for the rest of the battle)
    Description: The user makes one handseal and stomps/hits the ground pulling the earth apart leaving a thin layer of earth over a 90m deep hole lined with spikes (unknown to the opponent). The pulled apart earth flips up long range from behind the user and opponent enclosing them in a cone of earth in which has small holes to let light in. Due to the lack of earth underneath only C-rank and below earth techs can be used by the opponent while inside the cone, this tech strips the user of his Doton for the rest of the battle. After 2 turns (users) the thin floor collapses causing all thats standing on it to fall into the deep hole also making the cone of earth crumble and fall, with A-rank force, onto anything within it. Due to the holes in the cone any attack on it A-rank and above causes it to fall prematurely and cause the cave in.

    - Can only use once per battle
    - User takes 25 damage and loses Doton for the rest of the battle
    - The Byakugan can see the hole in the ground
    - No F-ranked teches for the rest of the battle
    - No S-ranked elemental jutsu while in use

    X-Pending-X Leaving for another mod

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    This is too similar to existing techniques that create hole unknown to the enemy with a thin cover on top. Don't resubmit.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 10-01-2012 at 07:51 PM.

  17. #1567
    Igneel's Avatar
    Status
    Igneel is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Mar 2011
    Location
    Poking inside a "Taco" ;3
    Posts
    9,567
    Post Thanks / Like
    "Fear. Fear attracts the
    fearful. The strong. The weak.
    The innocent. The corrupt.
    Fear. Fear is my ally."
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Akuma Yuuchi|Devil Bringer
    Rank:S
    Type:Weapon
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:40(+10 per turn)
    Damage:N/A
    Description: Devil bringer is a weapon forged by Igneel himself.He made this weapon to incorporate with his fighting style.Devil bring is a glove that is worn by the user on his right hand.The gloves has 4 kunai shaped blades attached to it and these blades are connected to the gloves by a long thread and so the blades can be dispatched at the will of the wielder.Both the thread and the blades are made up of a special material only found in the land of kumogakure such that they are virtually indestructible.User can control the threads and thereby control the blade using his chakra.The threads can extend upto mid range.
    -Must be from kumogakure
    -Must be atleast sannin rank
    -No special abilities besides being indestructable
    -can only be used by Igneel

    X-Declined-X Nothing indestructible
    EDIT: Approved.


    Ninpou:Kikaku Kae|Ninja Art: Projectile substitution
    Rank:C
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:15
    Damage:N/A
    Description:After throwing a projectile,the user can substitute the thrown projectile with anything that the user is carrying with him at the moment for example like substituting kunai with shuriken.User cannot swap the thrown projectile with his CW.
    -Cannot swap with CW
    -Can only be taught by Igneel

    X-Pending-X There are numerous ways it could be exploited but then again it should be fine. Another mods input needed

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Don't resubmit. Has the potencial to be overused and exploited in excess
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 10-01-2012 at 08:19 PM.

  18. #1568
    Scorps's Avatar
    Status
    Scorps is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    May 2008
    Location
    Jigoku
    Posts
    17,202
    Post Thanks / Like
    Hitler? Don't make me laugh...
    I'm far worse.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Genjutsu: Senkyoushi | Illusionary Arts: Missionary
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A (40 if done with hand seals)
    Description:
    The user will induce a simple but precise and useful illusion onto the enemy making him feel a blow was just delivered to the back of his knees. As a reflexive response, in reality his legs lose strength and the enemy falls on his knees immediately. While quite simple, the technique serves many purposes and leaves the enemy vulnerable. The technique can target other areas and deliver similar blows to induce other similar reflexive actions. If the user does 2 handseals (boar+rat) he can cause the enemy to experience pain and even target the enemy's neck from behind, making the enemy experience severe pain and loss of limb control for a few moments, collapsing to the ground as if a precise blow was given to a nervous cluster in the neck. Off course in reality, no damage is done but the body is fooled into reacting in a reflexive manner to the illusionary blows.
    Note: Can only be taught by Scorps
    Note: For the hit to cause damage, the user needs to do the handseals.
    ____________
    -Approved-


    Magarime | Flip
    Type: Supplementary/Defensive
    Rank: C-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    A simple Taijutsu move, Flip pertains to a set of specific movements that the ninja can execute to dodge, counter, avoid or simply to move on the battlefield in a more advantageous way.While any ninja can do this simple movement, this technique takes it to another level by, through training, combining it with chakra and making it that much faster, combining the muscle strength with focusing chakra into the limbs. This specific set of movements consists on flips, either lateral flips (or cartwheels) back flips or front flips. The user will charge his muscles and spring his body, performing either a lateral, front or a back flip, with or without the help of his hands. If he uses his hands he can do up to 4 consecutive flips that will bring him from short to mid range from his initial position. The speed of the flips is directly proportionate to the skill the user has in Taijutsu and can be enough to dodge certain techniques/attacks if the ninja is skillfull enough. Since its a basic Taijutsu movement, the user can perform it to attack by using weapons or techs that would logically be usable in the situation and with the Flip technique.

    Note: Can only be taught by Scorps
    ____________
    -Approved-


    Ro-ru | Roll
    Type: Supplementary/Defensive
    Rank: C-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    A simple Taijutsu move, Roll pertains to a set of specific movements that the ninja can execute to dodge, counter, avoid or simply to move on the battlefield in a more advantageous way. While any ninja can do this simple movement, this technique takes it to another level by, through training, combining it with chakra and making it that much faster, combining the muscle strength with focusing chakra into the limbs. This specific set of movements consists on rolls, either back rolls, front rolls or side rolls (also called strifes or strifing rolls). The user will charge his muscles and take a lower stance, while using the strength of his body to either do a lateral roll, a front roll, or a back roll, with or without the use of his hands. The roll can be done on the ground (shorter but faster) or by jumping and rolling at the same time (longer but slightly slower). The speed of the rolls is directly proportionate to the skill the user has in Taijutsu and can be enough to dodge certain techniques/attacks if the ninja is skillfull enough. Since its a basic Taijutsu movement, the user can perform it to attack by using weapons or techs that would logically be usable in the situation and with the Roll technique.

    Note: Can only be taught by Scorps
    ____________
    -Approved-
     
         
    Last edited by Nexus; 10-14-2012 at 01:09 AM. Reason: -

  19. #1569
    Lysander's Avatar
    Status
    Lysander is online now
    Gender
    Join Date
    Aug 2011
    Posts
    6,456
    Post Thanks / Like
    #hashtag
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    breathless rush (Ni ken iki sattou)
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Description:This attack focuses on the ability of the user using two swords.He user will take in a deep breath while wielding a sword in both hands.After he has done he will unleash a barrage of attacks using the two swords.These strikes will be quicker and stronger than normal kenjutsu attacks as they are mixed with chakra and with the user holding his breath and releasing a breath with each strike each strike will become stronger and quicker than a normal barrage of attacks.
    -Only usable three times a battle
    -Must be taught by Lysander

    4.20 to 5.00
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ppOQ3Pf-CDA
    ||Approved||

    Lightning parry (raikou kassha)
    Type:Defense
    Rank:B
    Range:Short
    Chakra:20
    Damage:40
    Description:The user will combine chakra with both of the swords he is holding and parry strikes with are hit at him.While parrying the user will releases lightning from the blade but only a small amount so that when every parry is successful lightning travels from the users swords through the enemy's and into there body slowly paralysing them.
    -Must be taught by Lysander
    -Only usable four times a battle
    ||Declined|| Define "slowly paralyzing them"

    Forceful strike (chikara dageki)
    Type:Attack
    Rank:B
    Range:Short
    Chakra:20
    Damage:40
    Description:While holding a sword in both hands the user will alternate stabbed lunges at the opponent and releasing a short stream of chakra from one sword and then a short stream of lightning with the other.When the chakra should strike the user it will leave a slight bruise and cause the area hit to become weakness making the place his more vulnerable,If the user should clash swords the release of chakra at the tip of the sword will push the sword/or weapon back leaving the opponent open.If the lightning should hit the enemy it will leave a slight burn and paralyses the area struck for a two seconds.
    -Must be taught by Lysander
    -Only usable four times a battle
    ||Declined|| Do not Resubmit
     
         
    Last edited by RokuNR; 09-30-2012 at 11:11 PM.

  20. #1570
    Taiketsu Yagami's Avatar
    Status
    Taiketsu Yagami is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Apr 2011
    Location
    Where do u think @_@
    Posts
    5,850
    Post Thanks / Like
    This user has no status.
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    |Kei-Sekken| Strong World Insight
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra:30
    Damage:N/A
    Description: To deal with high paced attacks or taijutsu that a Kei-Sekken user can't normally counter, the user will cut off his sight, hearing, touch, and smell while activating his mind's eye and utilizing chakra to enhance it. Through this, the user will rely on this and be able to sense incoming threats within the vacinity of close range and counter effectively with minimal, non wasted movements. While this is activated the user can't offensively attack as techniqually, he/she has no idea where the opponent actually is unless in close range, but can use defensive moves that will hurt the opponent.
    Notes:
    -Lasts a full turn after activation.
    -Usable 3x
    -Can't react to things that practically disappear when moving.

    ||Declined|| Do Not Resubmit

    |Kei-Sekken| Strong World Nail Punch
    Rank:C-A
    Type: Attack
    Range:short
    Chakra:15-30
    Damage:30-60
    Description: The nail gun punch is a special technique where the user punches the opponent with a lot of force. Utilizing chakra, the user causes the force to pass through the skin into the insides of the body from the impacted spot. (Allowing for passing through hard defenses) The user then releases the chakra in controlled bursts, causing multiple impacts on the infected spot for maximum damage. This happens in a fluid motion, simulating striking a nail into iron and is capable of easily breaking through terrain. There are 3 version, the 3 ren punch (C-rank), 4 ren (B-rank), and 5 ren (A-rank).
    Notes:This technique can be used up to the chakra limit of "60". (2 A-rank versions, 3 B-rank versions, 4 C-ranks, or anything imbetween that equals 60)

    ||Approved||

    |Tebukuro Armanents| Gloves of Amanents
    Rank:S
    Type:Supplementary|Attack|Defend
    Range:Self
    Chakra:N/A
    Damage:N/A (+10 to taijutsu)
    Description: The original Kei-Sekken user was a brawler who firmly believed that the body was your best weapon. He was forced to enter a tournament where some type of equipment was mandatory so he had an old friend forge him special gloves. The gloves of armanents are special gloves crafted from not only a very durable fiber capable of deflecting sword strikes and other sharp objects, but are highly resistant towards nature effects allowing a user to even perform a hand stand on fire or even an electrically charged floor (Of course the rest of their body would still be effected). The fiber being not only flexible but incredibly hard makes punches devestating, making it perfect for Kei-Sekken users. Although, their specific purpose is that they amplify all moves within the Kei-Sekken style by one rank in power and effectivness that have to deal with utilizing the limbs or body.

    Notes:
    -Any 5 Kei-Sekken techniques can be amplified and any technique can only be amplified once.
    -The gloves can limit chakra flow so only two non Kei-Sekken or taijutsu moves can be used per turn.
    -Only usable by Taiketsu Yagami and other Kei-Sekken users

    ||Declined|| Do not Resubmit

    Dropping:

    "Bakusaiga"
    Rank:S
    Type:Weapon
    Range:Short
    Chakra:N/A
    Damage:N/A
    Description: "Bakusaiga" the weapon of legend that gave the holder the supposed power of a tailed demon. Whoever held this weapon would get a very dense chakra so ominous that they were put into legends and folk tales. Taiketsu Yagami found this sword and the truth behind it came with a tablet only readable by those combatible with the chakra. The sword's abilities actually come from a monster known as "Yama" A artificial chakra monster with chakra levels so dense and high, it was considered a 0 tailed beast. The Sage of Six Path's decendent was able to kill off the monster and seal his chakra into the sword while engraving a seal that allowed the chakra to mix with the person who held it if compatable. When the user releases the seal, they become infused with the chakra making them a monster in a sense by giving them demonic chakra with very high chakra levels.

    ~Abilities:
    -This sword syncs with the user making the user's chakra become very dense and demonic while taking on a green hue, increasing the power of non-elemental ninjutsu[+5] aswell as making all chakra based techniques to be equal to an elemental technique of the same rank.
    -The amount of chakra being channeled causes the user's chakra levels to rise substantually. (They can be considered a tailed beast without a tail like Kisame)
    -When a foreign object touches the user's chakra, they get burned in a similar manner to Naruto in his incomplete form since the chakra is so demonic.
    -The sword itself is virtually indestructable due to alloy it is made from and can stand very high temperatures.

    ~Restrictions:
    -While using this sword, the user can only use techniques that require creating the jutsu or element itslef since this chakra can't be channled into foreign objects.
    -The sword's granted abilities last 5 turns after activation
    -The user suffers in a similar manner to Naruto while wielding it after activation. (After 5 turns of using this chakra, the user's body begins to shut down starting with right arm, next turn left arm, next turn legs, and then next turn body making them completely paralyzed and in need of medical attention.
    -The user is limited to only two moves a turn while this is active
    -Can only be wielded by Taiketsu Yagami (Anyone else, the chakra would severly injure as it can't mix with theirs.)
     
         
    Last edited by RokuNR; 09-30-2012 at 11:16 PM.

  21. #1571
    Mythological Envy Coyote's Avatar
    Status
    Coyote is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Mar 2011
    Posts
    12,317
    Post Thanks / Like
    Lord Snow.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Sarutahiko's Rakuseki Shibu | Sarutahiko's Fallen Branch
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short - Medium
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    It is said that the arm from the God - Sarutahiko was slashed off during a duel with his older brother who secretly wished for him to fail as the protector of all living things that reside on earth. When the arm was decapitated, it's said that from the heavens it fell and landed in a temple in the deserts of the land of Wind. For many years his arm was to have been guarded by the monks who inhabited the temple until the bandit raids. From then it rested with the temple unknown to those in the outside world. Though the myth is popular among local towns there is a weapon that is said to be forged with the power of the arm. This metallic arm fits on a humans arm up to around the elbow. It's colored with a dull grey and a black wrist. Even though this ancient weapon may looks old, the abilities is great. The branch metal arm harnesses the power that is surely mother earth to a godlike extent. Strengthening the abilities if related to Earth and smashing down the uses of water. If a source of chakra is underground, whether it be a enemy shinobi or sneak attack the weapon tightens on the wearers arm to give them a warning that something is impending in the ground below them. This arm has a permanent force upon it that equals "Earth Release: Earth Spear Technique", this however only applies in the arm that the weapon is worn giving physical attacks a +10 in offensive power that uses the arm - taijutsu mostly. This branch arm is a taijutsu users dream giving the boost of power in one arm, if a target is hit with that arm it's as if they've been directly in the chest with battering ram, severely damaging their internal organs. Due to the arms god-like power it's indestructible and cannot be broken by means of other weapons or elements. Anything else is listed below..

    Note: Indestructible
    Note: The +10 boost in physical attacks only applies to those in which the arm is used - certain taijutsu attacks
    Note: Sensing of chakra within the Earth only - up to mid-range/usable twice per conflict
    Note: Increases "Earth Release: World Shaking" by 2 ranks and also as the earth shakes, jagged rocks protrude from the ground
    Note: If a water attack comes towards the user or under them, the arm reacts by deflecting the water chakra - usable once per conflict
    Note: If another shinobi attempts to wear the branch, it turns them into stone - thus killing them
    Note: Once per conflict during a taijutsu attack if the arm makes contact with the target , the branch will release a large amount of chakra and increases the weight of the traget to an extremely high amount. This makes then drop to the ground by the sheer weight for 1 turn
    Note: All abilities are counted as a technique per turn other than the +10 to physical attacks
    Note: This weapon may only be worn by a biography used by Coyote unless stated otherwise

    ||Declined|| The description is polished, but this technique is void of any true restrictions, and it's pretty overpowered.

    Dropping this weapon
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post5126896
     
         
    Last edited by RokuNR; 09-30-2012 at 11:19 PM.

  22. #1572
    Yūsuke's Avatar
    Status
    Yūsuke is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Aug 2010
    Location
    On the lonely path of destruction.
    Posts
    12,715
    Post Thanks / Like
    This user has no status.
     



    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Katon & Fuuton : Hotaru) - Fire & Wind Release : Fireflies
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user concentrates his fire chakra into the air around the designated area and uses shape manipulation to form firefly-like shapes in the air made out of fire that float in the air. They do not fly around like real fireflies and can only cause burns upon contact with the enemy. The real danger is after the first phase of technique, the user will then clap his hands and then begin channeling his wind chakra into the already-existing fireflies in the area and cause them to radiate even brighter and then go up in an fiery explosion, severely burning the enemy.

    Note : Created by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : User themselves are capable of getting caught in explosion if too near
    Note : No Fire and Wind Techniques above S-rank to be used in the same turn
    Note : While fireflies are in the air, no wind or fire techniques of any rank is to be used

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Why is this S-Rank? Not only that but this has several techniques very similar all around. Its just tiny fireflies of fire. We have butterflies, falcons, eagles, sparrows, etc etc all of fire that work in a very similar manner.

    (Suiton : Shokushu Hakkyou) - Water Release : Tentacle Mayhem
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive / Defensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user performs a single handseal and concentrates his water chakra into four locations on the ground around him in a short-range radius. This will then allow him to materialize seemingly harmless, meter-long puddles of water on the ground, making the opponent think that it doesn't do anything but a moment later, huge tentacles of water erupt out of the puddles and have a long-range reach, similar to that of the 'Earth Release : Great Stone Golem' technique. Through the manipulation of water chakra within the tentables, the user allows the tentacles to take on physical characteristics. In other words, the tentacles will be capable of lifting opponents off the ground instead of letting them slip through since it is water. The water tentacles are capable of taking in the targets as well, drowning them within the tentacles.

    Note : Created by -Yusuke-
    Note : Usable only three times per battle
    Note : Number of water tentacles can be reduced
    Note : No Water Release techniques above A-rank in the same turn
    Note : Puddles of water can only be created short-range from the user
    Note : Water Tentacles last only 3 turns after activated or until released

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    If they are kept active, they need to spend chakra to keep them active. The reference to the stone golem makes no sense.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 10-01-2012 at 07:57 PM.

  23. #1573
    Ryuko's Avatar
    Status
    Ryuko is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Jun 2011
    Location
    Dublin, Ireland
    Posts
    9,842
    Post Thanks / Like
    I'm tired
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Frogs
    Scroll Owner: Kamui...
    Other Users who have signed contract: none
    Summoning Boss if existing: n/a
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:n/a
    Description and Background:
    the frogs are close relatives to the toads they vary in size and are know to be very mean to hostiles the larges known frog stands at the same height as gamabunta hey are mostly green skinned and have yellow tounges they hale from the deeps swamps outside of konohagakure and where signed by Kamui.. at the age of 4 they are very commonly found as babies hopping around Konoha

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Don't resubmit. All Toads are Frogs and some Frogs are Toads. Thus, with Toad being a cannon contract, no frog contract.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 09-29-2012 at 10:33 AM.

  24. #1574
    Banned
    Status
    Venus is offline
    Join Date
    Jul 2011
    Location
    長い白い雲の土地
    Posts
    17,790
    Post Thanks / Like
    私は歩くとき、私は一
    人で歩く。私が戦うと
    き、私は一人で戦う。
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Katon: akuma no ringu 悪魔のリング) - Fire Release : The Devils Ring
    Type : Offensive/Offence
    Rank : S
    Range : mid/long
    Chakra cost : 45
    Damage points : 75
    Description : The user takes a deep breath as they perform a few seals. As the finish the seals, the swallow their breath and push the chakra to their feet, releasing it into the ground. Fire shoots through the earth and surrounds the opponent underground. Flames shoot from the earth in the form of a circle around the opponent, surrounding them in a 10foot flaming wall. The flames twist and join at the top (like a reverse twister) the second the shoot from the earth and engulf the opponent in hellish flames.

    Note : Created by Saizo
    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : If wind is added to it, the flames get stronger and intensify. It then becomes a forbidden jutsu and emits heat that burn anything within mid range.
    Note : Wind has to be added the second the flames shoot up from the earth, so the user will take 30 damage from standing within mid range.

    Either modify or state what needs to be changed if need be.

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Under the Blue Rule
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 09-28-2012 at 09:17 PM.

  25. #1575
    Xylon's Avatar
    Status
    Xylon is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Jan 2009
    Posts
    19,750
    Post Thanks / Like
    saraisthebest! #henrikisevil
     

    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Sound Release: Resonance (Ototon: Kyoshin)
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Resonance is a damage dealing sound release technique. After performing a series of hand seals, the user focus on index and middle finger to write two circular seals in the air until they form into glyphs. These glyphs then move on the ground and the air until they position themselves appropriately to strike the correct area. The user then performs a seal of confrontation to activate the technique, following which both glyphs release a strong sound wave in between their vicinity. The waves are of the same resonance which results in a reaction, the aftermath is a huge concussive blast which spreads horizontally 360 degrees crushing everything with a tremendous force.
    Note: Requires Sound Release and Fuuinjutsu.
    -Usable twice/battle.
    -Cannot use S rank sound release the following 2 turns.
    -Visual Description of the glyph (Ignore the vertically laid ones beside the person, the only one above him and below):

    ____________
    -Approved-


    Erm. . While we're at this
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post1392703
    Infernal Prison is a similar technique i created, im requesting permission to brand such glyph techniques by adding a Prefix to their name.
    ____________
    Resubmit that one as an update.


    Sealing Technique: Dark Ecriture (Fuinjutsu: Yami no Chojutsu)
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10/turn)
    Damage Points: 10/ turn (to the user)
    Description: Dark Ecriture is a technique that allows the user to detect hidden seals within the users field of vision. The technique activates using a seal of confrontation following which many sealing formula appear around the users left eye. They then begin to sink inside using the lens which itself is a painful process where the user needs to keep his eye open. Once performed the seals inside the eye filter the users vision making everything appear grayscale. All seals however that are hidden or apparent starts to glow, the user is able to see the glow even if the seals are hidden behind objects or clothes. With added focus he is able to read them identifying their purpose.
    Note: Usable twice in battle, Lasts 4 turns.
    ____________
    -Declined-
    Add that it can only detect seals up to its own rank.

    Sealing Technique: Flying Thunder God (Fuuinjutsu: Hiraishin)
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20/Seal
    Damage Points: N/a
    Description: The technique is a espionage and anti-espionage technique. The user performs a series of hand seals and touches the seal or an object a sealing technique(Curse seals, FTG etc) is applied on. An FTG formula then appears on the user of the seal and from there replicates itself on every other person the seal is applied(by the same user of course) on allowing Minato to track the origin of a technique a precisely the number of people the same technique is used over. Adding to the ability to transport himself using Flying Thunder God technique, Minato is able to have a telepathic contact with the user allowing him to communicate before making any attempts.
    Note: Usable twice per battle.
    ____________
    -Declined-
    Leave the thunder god alone lol
     
         
    Last edited by Nexus; 10-07-2012 at 11:28 PM. Reason: -

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •