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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    ( Katon: Teikoku hinoken ) - Fire Release: Imperial Fire Swords
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary/deffensive
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short - mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user creates several fire swords and shoots them at their target. The user can also use these swords for protection from incoming attacks or use them as normal swords where the user holds one in his hand.
    Notes:
    *Can only be taught by Kurosaki-kun.
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    Other than being too broad, it has been attempted before by Mathias, plus holding a sword made of fire in your hand?

    ( Katon: Fenikkusudoraibu ) - Fire Release: Phoenix Drive
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: By making the Tiger handseal, the user channels his Katon chakra out of his body into the air then form it into a medium sized fire phoenix that charges towards their target from front engulfing them with fire as it passes through them, then the phoenix dives up in the air and descends back down in great speed hitting the opponent once again and the ground thus exploding and damaging anything nearby.
    Notes:
    *Can only be used x3.
    *Can only be taught by Kurosaki-kun
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    Similar Techniques exist, Faust's Rising Phoenix Technique to be exact

    ( Katon: Jiraigen ) - Fire Release: Minefield
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: By Stomping the ground the user releases a very dense fire chakra on the surface of the battlefield's ground which covers it. If an Earth technique is done in the next 3 turns it will disturb the dense fire chakra causing a huge deadly explosion to occur that will cover a wide area. The same effect can be achieved if the user did the Tiger handseal and released the dense chakra.
    Notes:
    *The dense chakra stays on the battlefield for 3 turns.
    *The user may only use up to B-Rank fire techniques in those 3 turns.
    *Can only be taught by Kurosaki-kun.
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    Overpowered and unrealistic, and a rip off of Alucard's Earth Mine Technique only with Fire Release.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 12-30-2012 at 01:16 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Erzo View Post
    Conversation with Scorps, who allowed me permission to resubmit this: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...=3623&u2=83133

    (Suiton: Bāsuto) – Water Release: Burst
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Depends on Earth/Wood jutsu used before hand.
    Chakra cost: 15
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user would activate this jutsu which allows him to add his water chakra to all Earth/Wood jutsus used no more than a second after the usage of the Earth/Wood jutsu. Although it does no physical harm, this jutsu allows the user to shoot out an extremely quick burst of water straight after an Earth/Wood jutsu is used from wherever that Earth/Wood jutsu appears from. For example, if Spikes are used, this jutsu would allow a quick burst of water to shoot out to anywhere short range from the spikes themselves. This jutsu does not work on the mud related Earth jutsu. The water itself does no damage, however it has some pushing force which is able to knock an opponent back a meter or two, other than that it mainly distracts the opponent. The user can deactivate this jutsu at any time, and can stop the addition of water chakra so that he/she can control when the water bursts out.

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    ±± Approved ±±
    Removed the restrictions. Its too weak to have them. Also, each use would be momentarily and not activation bound.
    Updating.

    (Suiton: Bāsuto) – Water Release: Burst
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Depends on Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu used before hand.
    Chakra cost: 15
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user would activate this jutsu which allows him to add his water chakra to all Earth/Wood/Ice jutsus used no more than a second after the usage of the Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu. Although it does no physical harm, this jutsu allows the user to shoot out an extremely quick burst of water straight after an Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu is used from wherever that Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu appears from. For example, if Spikes are used, this jutsu would allow a quick burst of water to shoot out to anywhere short range from the spikes themselves. This jutsu does not work on the mud related Earth jutsu. The water itself does no damage, however it has some pushing force which is able to knock an opponent back a meter or two, other than that it mainly distracts the opponent. The user can deactivate this jutsu at any time, and can stop the addition of water chakra so that he/she can control when the water bursts out.
    ______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Adding Water to Ice is a no go, keep the original one.

    New

    (Fūton: Ryū no iki) – Wind Release: Breath of the Dragon
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Range: Depends on Earth/Ice/Wood jutsu used before hand.
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user would activate this jutsu which allows him to add his Wind chakra to all Earth/Wood/Ice jutsus used no more than a second after the usage of the Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu. Although it does no physical harm, this jutsu allows the user to shoot out an extremely quick burst of sharpened wind straight after an Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu is used from wherever that Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu appears from. For example, if Spikes are used, this jutsu would allow a quick burst of wind to shoot out to anywhere short range from the spikes themselves. This jutsu does not work on the mud related Earth jutsu. The Wind itself can do enough damage, although nothing fatal, it can leave the opponent cut in multiple places whilst at the same time having enough strength to push them in a specific direction (depends on which side the wind is coming from).
    Note: Can only be used 4 times.
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    ✘ Declined ✘
    No variation of this technique will be approved.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 12-30-2012 at 01:14 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Suiton: Karui Shussui) Water Style: Minor Flood
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user creates a thin layer of water which coats the battleground floor. Then, by channeling his/her chakra into this water the user is able to detect slight ripples and movement inside the water.
    -The thin nature of this water layer means that it is unable to assist in the use of lightning style techniques.
    -Must be taught by 'The Girl on Fire
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    ✘ Declined, Do not Resubmit ✘
    No "Sensing" related abilities will be approved anymore, be it chakra or pressure based, there are too many of those already.

    The Mogadorian Blade
    Rank:S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The Mogadorian Blade is a short sword/ dagger with a twisted, pointed handle which has the unique ability of turning all the wielders fire jutsu's into blue flames. The blue flames are hotter than normal flames and therefore add to the damage done by fire jutsu. The Mogadorian blade in itself is not what makes it special, but the techniques that are used along with it, they are all called Legacies.
    *Fire Style: Shield Legacy - While holding the Mogadorian Blade, the user sends a surge of fire chakra throughout their body, giving off the appearance of being engulfed in flames. This defense allows the user to block flames up to A Rank, Water up to B Rank, or S Ranked Wind. Only one of these can be blocked in the turn that it is used.
    *Fire Style: Absorption Legacy - While holding the Mogadorian blade, the user holds the Mogadorian Blade and envelops the user in a red aura. The user takes the hit of the flames, and its power is then absorbed into the Mogadorian Blade. A blue hue is then seen coming from the blade upon which enhances the user's fire techniques all becoming blue flames. The blade can only absorb one C Ranked or below Fire technique per turn.

    Note: Can only be used by The Girl on Fire and those she allows.
    Note: Only one Legacy can be used per turn.
    Note: Through the Use of Fire Style Absorption Legacy, the Mogadorian Blade gains either +5 (D Ranked jutsu) or +10(C Ranked Jutsu) to the user's next fire technique.
    Note: User cannot enhance Forbidden Ranked Fire Techniques using the Absorption Legacy.
    Note: The user's flames turn blue only after it has absorbed C ranked and below fire techniques. It takes one Absorption Legacy absorption for all of the user's fire techniques to turn blue.
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    ✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
    rip off of Rin Okumora's CW in the core ability, changing the color of your fire is not allowed, making it hotter by doing so is nothing but saying that you are making a new "form" of fire, which could collide with being a CE, and Fire variations are strictly prohibited.

    (Fuuton: Umou Chikara) Wind Release: Downforce
    Type: Offensive/ Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user channels wind chakra into the air and concentrates it into a visible circle 15 meters in diameter and 20 feet above the opponent with the opponent in the center of the circle (The circle of chakra glows blue). Once settled in position the wind chakra generates a strong current that pushes down to the ground from above the opponent in effect sticking them to the ground and making it very difficult for the opponent to move.
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    Last edited by Ryūjin; 12-30-2012 at 01:25 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Lachlan) - Summoning Technique: Lachlan
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user bites their thumb and summons Lachlan, the Murmur. Lach is a normal sized Lyrebird who when summoned sits comfortably on the left shoulder of the user. His nickname of "The Murmur" comes from his specific A-rank genjutsu which he uses to disorient opponents and limit their capabilities. The genjutsu is initiated when Lach uses his natural abilities to re-produce any sound and throw his voice to create whispers and murmurs of varying loudness around the target. By changing the loudness and direction of the murmur rapidly it creates a strong sense of confusion in the opponent who falls under the genjutsu after three seconds where they begin to hear the voices get louder and louder becoming more disruptive. It gets to the point where the opponent becomes incapable of concentrating and can no long use techniques above A-rank. What makes this technique especially frustrating to an opponent is that Lach maintains the sounds for two turns once he begins, causing an opponent who breaks to become immediately targeted by it again.
    -Lasts four turns once summoned.
    -Genjutsu can be maintained for two turns and can only be used once.

    Approved Lyrebird Contract: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post8961193
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    Love the idea but you need to rank the ability itself. He also needs a range (short) for his summoning act in itself and a range for his ability. I would also suggest defining it a bit and it would be best to add an explanation on why your opponent will be limited in the use of techniques. For me, limiting the user to anything above A-Rank is a bit much...perhaps specifying some things in there would help. In essence, this needs definition.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 01-03-2013 at 08:21 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Suiton: Mizu no yoroi) Water Style: Water Armour
    Type:Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank:C-Rank
    Range:Short Range
    Chakra:15 Chakra
    Damage:30 Damage
    Description: after preforming the rabbit handseal the user makes a layer of thickness 15 cm made of water around all his body except his face, the suiton chakra will make the outside layer more harder and bendable and it will be enough to repel taijutsu, kunais or shurikens and they're not able to go through it, the armour can be used as a sacrifice to survive an explosion, when this jutsu ends it turns into a small puddle.
    mote: only usable for four times per battle
    note: lasts for 2 turns
    note: it makes the user slower in movements and heavier
    note: the user can't use up to C-Rank fire while using this jutsu
    note: the user can use up to B-Rank fire for the first turn after this jutsu ends
    note: can only be taught by FeeLPaiN and those Who learn it
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    This makes no sense, considering water is no where near solid enough to guard against physical attacks like Taijutsu, you didn't even limit the level of Taijutsu it can guard against, not to mention you will drown when your head is surrounded by the water, you would be incapable of breathing and thus suffocating.

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    (Robin fuddo) Robin Hood
    Type: Weapon
    Rank:S-Rank
    Range:Short - Long Range
    Chakra:10 Chakra (for each chakra infused-arrow)
    Damage: 20 Damage
    Description: Robin Hood is a bow made from the wood of the best trees from konohagakure's trees, the bow looks like any normal bow, it's a complete black with a golden chinese dragon drawn on it. it's arrows have peaked edges, and they're made from chakra-conductor material .when it has katon chakra in it, it will release a small flame from it's peak and when it's thrown that flame will engulf the whole arrow. when it has doton chakra it will become unbreakable. when it's thrown with futon chakra the peak will shape the air into a crescent in front of it, and it will be able to pierce through rocks and trees. when it have suiton chakra in it it will become bendable, and when it's thrown and hit a hard object it will turn into a liquid with high viscosity (the same as Starch Syrup Capture Field jutsu). when it's thrown while infused with raiton chakra it's speed will be as fast as a running shinobi, and it will release a lightning tail from end.
    note: all the arrows worth D-ranked jutsu
    note: arrows don't count as one of the 3 jutsus allowed per turn but only 2 arrows can be thrown per turn
    note: an arrow can be infused with only 1 chakra nature
    note: the user have only 30 arrow for each battle
    note: can only be used by FeeLPaiN
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    ✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
    This collides with Mathias's Sniper Arts CFS, as chakra enhanced arrows are patented for sniper arts only.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 12-30-2012 at 01:46 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Fire Tornado(kasai tatsumaki)
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description:the user blows out fire from his pors all over the users body as
    the user is spinng rapidly
    _____________________
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    Messy description, please make it more understandable.

    Demon hell blade(akuma naraku ken
    Type: Weapon sword
    Rank: B
    Chakra Cost: 20/40 with element charka
    Damage Points: 40/60 with element charka
    Description:the user can shoot shards from the blade that are made from some kind or ore
    ________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Same as above


    Summoning Animal: Ox
    Scroll Owner: TheGreyFox
    Other Users who have signed contract:None
    Summoning Boss if existing: None
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:None
    http://t0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:A...UwLdsoFVACFLKg
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    Ox contract can't be made, as it's one of pain's summons.


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    Last edited by Ryūjin; 12-30-2012 at 01:54 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Bug Style: Insect Trigger Finger [Mushiton: Konchuu Torigaa no Yubi]
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 20(+5 per turn)
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user points his pointer finger at the opponent and gathers small insects on his pointing fingers knuckle he then pulls his finger back as if he was pressing a trigger and shoots the bugs at the opponent using his chakra he then has the bugs continually feed on the opponents chakra for 4-turns the bugs then comeback and replenish half of the users missing chakra.
    Note: Damage comes from bugs steal the opponents chakra.
    Note: Lasts for 4 turns.
    Note: Can only use this jutsu twice per battle.
    Note: Must have at least half of the opponents body in clear sight.
    Note: Can only be taught by Rohasu.
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    rip off of Scary Yamato's water laser technique in terms of the initial release, not to mention it makes no sense for chakra to shoot like a bullet from your finger, they approach the opponent with their flight speed, if you made any "chakra burst" from your finger to blow the bugs to fast like that the desired location you would kill them instead, also no gun like techniques.

    Water Style: Hidden Dragon Claw [Suiton: Kakusare Ta Doragon No Tsume]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: The user will channel his/her suiton chakra into thier feet then channel it from their feet under the ground, they then form it into a dragon like claw that is roughly the size of a grown adult, the user then from under the opponent rises the claw from underground and hits the opponent with the claws causing sever cuts on the both of the opponents arms and the opponents chest.
    Note: can only be used 6 times per battle.
    Note: The user can only use 1 water jutsu the following turn, but after that turn the user can use more than water jutsu again.
    Note: Severity of wound on opponent causes long times for forming hand seals (roughly about double the time).
    Note: Can use a large water source to create a bigger version of this jutsu to use on summonings.
    Note: Can only be taught by Rohasu.
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    ✘ Declined ✘
    Colored parts need grammar fixing to be understandable, remove using a large water source to create a bigger version of the technique, you can submit an advanced version of the technique after it's approved, but i won't allow any size alterations in the same technique, make it useable 4 times per battle, reword the second restriction making it "Only 1 Water technique can be used the following turn after this technique is used"


    Wind Release: False Kirin Pressure Wave [Fuuton: False Kirin Surasuto]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user sends their wind chakra into the clouds, then forms a wind version of kirin from the clouds he then send the false kirin crashing towards the opponent, about 4-feet away from the opponent the false kirin opens its mouth to shoot a wave of wind pressure at the opponents chest, during the process of shooting the pressured wind the false kirin slowly from its tail end vanishs, when the opponent is hit with this wave it flings them back quite a distance and reveals a large round hole in the opponents torso clothes, with a large bruise-like mark on their chest making them slower due to the pain of the bruise-like mark.
    Note: Can only be used once.
    Note: Cannot use wind jutsu the following turn.
    Note: Opponents movement is cut down the one rank below their current rank.
    Note: The false kirin takes one turn to form completely.
    Note: Can only be taught by Rohasu.
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    ✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
    No cannon technique's rip off, specially Kirin.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 12-30-2012 at 02:11 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Genjutsu: Hakugen no Kon (Illusion Technique: Yin's Illusion of Yang)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: This extremely skilled illusion technique distorts the perception of pain in a shinobi's body. This technique was designed as a means to increase the effectiveness of their own genjutsu on their opponents and also do decrease the effectiveness of their opponents illusions. This is done by a simple and subtle manipulation of the body's pain threshold. The user will preform the Boar, Hare, and Snake seals to activate this illusion. The illusion will work in one of two ways.
    (1) Increasing the pain threshold of your opponent thereby increasing the amount of pain it would take for them produce in order to release a genjutsu, should they attempt to release illusions in this manor. By manipulating the brains perception of pain it would require the pain to be at a much higher degree to cause the spike to re-establish a stable flow to push the chakra out.
    (2) Decrease the pain threshold on yourself allowing for smaller spikes to re-establish your natural balance and force illusions out. By decreasing your pain threshold, smaller spikes of chakra will be able to reaffirm you stable balance and even render higher ranked genjutsu useless.
    With that being said, as this technique works is meant to be a collaborative technique with other genjutsu, this technique allows for shinobi to use genjutsu techniques layered on.
    ~This technique can only be used with genjutsu in of A-ranked and below. As a result, as long as this genjutsu is active only genjutsu A-ranked and below can be used
    ~As this genjutsu can be layered, precise chakra control is needed with the techniques used in combination which means the user will be required to use +10 more chakra with any other genjutsu used in conjunction with this technique.
    ~This technique can only be used Twice Per battle and lasts 3 turns per activation
    ~Can only be taught by Reborn
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    Can't allow this. You can make it so that your enemy will feel an illusion that will make it SEEM as if he has a greater tolerance to pain but you can't actually do it. Pain is a physical stimuli that brings the body back to reality. You can't block it with this method. Only with medical arts.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 01-03-2013 at 08:22 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (kaze no dansu)-dance of the wind
    Type: supplementary/attack
    Rank: B
    Range:short/mid
    Chakra:20
    Damage: 40
    Description: the user releases a current of wind in the desired direction while at the same time focusing wind chakra at the soles of their feet. with each step they cover a tremendous amount of distance in almost an instant while traveling with the current. this is due to the increased pressure of wind under the foot propelling the user combined with the reduced wind resistance. as the current blowing towards the opponent, the target will be briefly be immobile leaving them open for attack.
    note: byakugan and 3 tomoe sharingan are able to follow the users movements

    X-Declined-X Existing technique
     
         
    Last edited by Xylon; 12-30-2012 at 02:13 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Nathan. View Post
    (Meiton No yoroi Amatsu Mikaboshi) Dark Release: Armor Of Amatsu Mikaboshi
    Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: -
    Description:
    This technique is very similar to the Uchiha Clan's Susanoo. The user will gather up a large amount of dark release chakra, then the user will mold the dark chakra into a sinister looking armor that will latch onto the skin of the user. Although, the technique can be used to cover a certain part of the body rather than the entire body. Dark chakra surrounds the user at all times, as long as the armor is attached to the user. In reality it is the chakra that defends against incoming attacks, not the armor itself.
    What the armor looks like:

    Note: Can only be used by Nathan.
    Note: Only lasts for 3 turns.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: No dark release techniques for one turn.
    Note: Protects you from S-rank and under fire and lighting jutsu's.
    Note: Protects you from B-rank earth and water.

    X-Declined-X Its a forbidden ranked advanced elemental active armour technique. So alot of issues with it:
    -One, forbidden ranked armour. Pretty much defends your against most S ranks, though nothing of the sort has been made yet if we consider it "new". It would be alrgiht i guess, but Forbidden Ranked means recoil damage.
    -Two, Its an elemental Armour. Two chakra natures to be exact, when youre already involved in nature transformation of an advanced element technically you shouldnt be to use other elements then the nature itself.
    -Three, if youre covered with Dark release chakra. How do you release your own elements when the armour absorb them as soon as you form them?
    PS: Come to me on msn when you have time, ive got something i wanna discuss.

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    (Meiton No yoroi Amatsu Mikaboshi) Dark Release: Armor Of Amatsu Mikaboshi
    Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: -
    Description:
    This technique is very similar to the Uchiha Clan's Susanoo. The user will gather up a large amount of dark release chakra, then the user will mold the dark chakra into a sinister looking armor that will latch onto the skin of the user. Although, the technique can be used to cover a certain part of the body rather than the entire body. Dark chakra surrounds the user at all times, as long as the armor is attached to the user. In reality it is the chakra that defends against incoming attacks, not the armor itself.
    What the armor looks like:

    Note: Can only be used by Nathan.
    Note: Only lasts for 3 turns.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: No dark release techniques when you first active this armor.
    Note: Protects you from S-rank and under fire and lighting jutsu's.
    Note: Protects you from B-rank earth and water.
    Note: Can only use dark release techniques while the armor is active.
    Note: Once the armor wears off the user is unable to use any dark/lighting/fire/wind release techniques for two turns.
    Note: Once the armor wears off the user, for two turns they are only able to use up to C-rank Water and earth release techniques.
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    ✘ Declined ✘
    No Susanoo rip offs, and it needs to have some intense physical damage to you, like much more slowed speed, ability to move being reduced etc, take all information related to Susanoo out, make it a form of a "barrier" not actually an armor, it can't protect from Fire and lightning just like that, Dark Release doesn't release raw chakra by itself, it does so after the absorption of energy based chakra, so mention that Fire and Lightning of S-rank are being absorbed not blocked, so it takes time depending on the size of the technique, remove the protection from Earth and Water, make it only capable of absorbing 2 Lightning or Fire techniques max, add that you can use Lightning and Fire techniques while the lightning is active, but using any other form of chakra will disrupt it.

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    (Doton: Furui ita-waza) Earth Release: Hands of the Forgotten
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: C-rank
    Range: Mid-range
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description:
    After using Earth Release: Swamp of the Underworld, the user is able to manipulate the swamps muck to form into multiple extendable arms that are able to reach out to the opponent and drag them into the pool. Or it could just be used to cling and hold target. The arms can easily be sliced by weapons such as katana's, kunai, etc. It is an effective technique for those who want to pin down a target for amount of time. The extendable arms have a limit to how far they can reach, they can only reach up to mid-range.
    Note: Can only be taught by Nathan.
    Note: Must have used Earth Release: Swamp of the Underworld before the use of this technique.
    _____________________________
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    Very similar to Scorps's Mud drowning technique.


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    (Meiton: Gōsuto Hanabi) Dark Release: Ghastly Fireworks
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B-rank
    Range: Short to Mid range
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description:
    First the user gathers up a large amount of dark release chakra around one of their arms, then user extends their arm forward and releases ghosts from a sphere in his/her left wrist. They seem to follow a set and guided path and they differentiate from it but they cause considerable damage to an opponent slamming into there stomach. This move covers a considerable distance and shoots what seems to be an endless wave of Dark Fireworks.

    Note: Can only be taught by Nathan.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    _____________________________
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    Define this "considerable" distance and damage, it's too broad and needs to be limited, also this isn't how Dark Release techniques work, you need to absorb energy based techniques or basically any chakra that can be turned into a raw form of chakra which is generated then, so add a note that this technique can only be used after using the "Dark Release: Inhaling Maw" technique or similar techniques, it can't be fired just like that.
     
         
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    (Doton: Sutoreganōna no majikkupasutapotto) - Earth Release: Strega Nona's Magic Pasta Pot
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-range for the pot/Mid-range for the threads
    Chakra cost: 15
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will channel his doton chakra into the ground in order to create a pot-shaped cavity within the ground. The pot-like void is encased in a layer of extremely hard stone for protection, and within it lays a number of extremely sticky threads made of mud. These threads can be either lengthened to send an opponent back, or decreased in length once attached to the opponent in order to pull him in. The ability to increase in length can be maintained even after the user stops his flow of chakra into the pot by storing doton chakra within the pot, however if the user cuts the stream of chakra between him and the pot "aka using another jutsu" he is no longer able to make them decrease in length.
    Notes:
    - Creating more than one pot counts as using the jutsu multiple times.
    - The strings can only be launched once, with either the ability to increase or decrease preset.
    - The traveling path of the strings can't be altered.
    _____________________________
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    Ok you say that the void of the pot has a thick layer of stone in order to protect, yet the technique is written as "supplementary", that needs to be changed, also define where exactly is the pot made, i mean beneath you or beneath your opponent, or just anywhere on the field? and remove the ability to make the threads increase in length after cutting your chakra flow of from the technique, earth chakra can't just act on it's own, you are the one who manipulates it, make this technique useable 4 times max.
     
         
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    Ninja Art:Nail Storm(Ninjutsu:Tsume No Arashi
    Type:Attack
    Rank:E
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:5
    Damage:10
    Description:The user will simply perform the dragon hand symbol then open their mouth releasing chakra in the shape of sharp nails.
    Notes/Restrictions
    ~Can deflect normal thrown weapons
    ~Can cut but only a maximum of an inch
    ~Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    ________________________
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    Similar to the cannon techniques of Hidden Needles, and Nail mist pierce.


    Ninja Art:Nightmare Tecknique(Ninjutsu:Akumu No Jutsu)
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:E
    Range:Short
    Chakra:5
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user will perform the dog handseal then clap hands together as they do this 3 demon like figures will appear with weapons that will charge at the enemy once in front of the enemy it they will poof creating a distraction and blocking view of opponent.
    Restrictions/Notes
    ~Lasts for one turn
    ~Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    ~Can only be used once per battle phase
    ~Require 1 turn breaks
    What they look like.



    _____________________________
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    What are the demons made of exactly, pure chakra? or are they simply illusions, i gotta be honest with you though, there are genjutsu techniques that can do what this technique does exactly and even better, like the flower petal escape technique for example.
     
         
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    Raiton Seiteki Batafurai (Static Butterflies)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: The user builds up lightning chakra within his palm and shapes it into a disk. He holds his palm above his head then as the chakra build up gradually increases, the user claps his hands together releasing a swarm of small butterflies (10-20 butterflies | Size: 5-7 cm) The butterflies then travel at the opponent hastily, and attach to his skin. And shock him multiple times. Due to multiple butterflies attacking him, the butterflies cause slight paralysis. Leaving the opponent stunned for a brief moment.
    Note: Can be used by swinging a staff or sword aswell
    Note: Can only be used every 2 turns.
    Note: Can only be taught by The 4th Raikage


    _____________________________
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    Mention how do the butterflies approach the opponent, is it a straight line, or can each be manipulated separately, make it useable 4 times per battle and remove the "attaching to the opponent's skin" part, everything else seems fine.


    Ninjutsu Betabeta Batafurai (Sticky Butterflies)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user shapes his chakra into a swarm of butterflies into his palms. (10-20 | Size: 5-7 cm) The user will then clap his hands together, releasing the butterflies at the opponent. The butterflies, trael at the opponent and stick themselves to the opponent. They share chakra due to them all coming from one jutsu. So if the butterflies are destroyed, or chakra is someone how flustered. They begin to flicker. Which allows the user to prepare himself for an attack or defend himself. This jutsu is useful, because it would allow the user and his commrades to see what kind of enemy they are up against.
    Note: Can be used by swinging a staff or sword aswell
    Note: Can only be taught by The 4th Raikage
    _____________________________
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    Flute of Divine Potential
    Rank: B
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: | + 10 to all taijutsu or Akimichi techs
    Description: A small flute made up of incredibly dense material. The flute allows the user to harnest there inner potential and confidence, and turn it into physical power. By first gathering blood, sweat, or tears. The user will focus chakra into the flute then play a light tune from there past. The tune will up lift there spirits and boost there confidence/morale giving them the will to fight and eventually win.
    (This is shown almost every time naruto is about to lose, i just turned it into a weapon)
    -Can only be used by Akimichi bios
    -Flute is indestructible.
    -Only used by The 4th Raikage and those I allow.
    _____________________________
    ✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
    The core of this technique doesn't make any sense, and its a mix of NB advanced Taijutsu "restricted ones" and unrealistic, when Naruto is almost about to lose his Kyuubi power arise, not his "confidence"
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    I am the current contract owner the contract was given to me by kamshiro and i am still listed as owner here is the proof: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=240965 under H: hoopoe owner haku

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu Raijin ) - Summoning Technique God of thunder
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Raijin Is the Chief of the Hoopoe summoning tribe, given his name due to his vast control over lighting release. He is a little larger then sauske's hawk, with a lighting shaped scar going across the right side of his face. He his friendly and will befriend his summoner rather quickly. He can use up to S rank lighting simply by flapping his wings.
    note: can only be summoned twice.
    note: he stays on the field for a total of 4 turns
    note: can't use kirin,normal chidori or chidori Sharpe spear
    ________________________
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    Define if he's able to use only projectile lightning techniques or all types, because there are other types like for example "Four Pillar Bind" technique, and make him use the lightning techniques through his mouth not his wings, it's fine if you make him capable of making lightning techniques without the need for handseals, reduce the summoning limit to once.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (doton-Hokori meisai) Earth style- Dust camouflage
    Rank: S
    Type: defence/attack
    Range: long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: The user stomps on the ground,whilst spreading his/her chakra through out the earth surface,causing dust to rise and envelop the whole terrain,while this is active the user is completely hidden from the naked eye,with the exception of byakugan users as the are able to see even through chakra.
    -twice per battle
    -lasts for 3 turns
    -this jutsu can't be used on all terrains.

    (Genjutsu-Hitojichi) - illusion technique- Hostage
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/defence
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user induces the target into a strong illusion,instantly making them notice a kunai that is held to the neck,the kunai is weilded from behind the target by an exact copy of the user thus why in some cases the target doesn't know its an illusion. upon noticing the kunai,the target hears threatening words,to be completely still or get their throat slit,if the target hesitates,the being slits their throat whilst disappearing, though its just a mere illusion the target is left in intense pain,once the illusion disperses.
    -Once per battle
    -No s-rank and above genjutsu next turn.
    -The target is held hostage for the period of 3 turns then the illusion disperses leaving the target unharmed.

    X-Declined-X Both are too generic and certainly dont qualify to be S ranked

    (Genjutsu-shitsumei) illusion style- blindness
    Rank: S
    Type: Defence/offense
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: The user casts a unique illusion on the foe making them think they have gone naturally blind suddenly and instantly.This illusion works fine on MS users as they would think that,the blindness is as a result of over useage of the MS and thus,has lost it's light but however,the target must already have the MS active and is in useage to belive this.
    -Lasts for two turn.
    -Ones per battle.

    X-Declined-X We're talking about placing a genjutsu over the dojutsu the specialize in genjutsu, do i need to say more? Not saying its impossible but you need to be reasonable
    (Doton-Hokori meisai) Earth style- Dust camouflage
    Rank: B
    Type: supplementary
    Range: long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user stomps on the ground,whilst spreading his/her chakra through out the earth surface,causing dust to rise and envelop the whole terrain thus why it serves as an escape plot,while this is active the user is completely hidden from the naked eye,with the exception of byakugan users as they are able to see even through chakra.
    -twice per battle
    -lasts for 3 turns
    -this jutsu can't be used on all terrains.
    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Similar Techniques exist.

    (Genjutsu-Hitojichi) - illusion technique- Hostage
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/defence
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user induces the target into a strong illusion,instantly making them notice a kunai that is held to the neck,the kunai is wielded from behind the target by an exact copy of the user thus why in some cases the target doesn't know its an illusion,if they have lost sight of the user. upon noticing the kunai,the target hears threatening words,to be completely still or get their throat slit.
    -Once per battle
    -The target is held hostage for the period of 3 turns then the illusion disperses leaving the target unharmed.
    __________________________
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    So how exactly is this genjutsu induced? it needs something like handseals, and in general genjutsu requires you to know the target's location, if you don't you can't catch him in the genjutsu, and the paralysis isn't done like that, it needs something restricting to happen in the genjutsu, like a chain that wraps around him or something of the sort, but hearing a few words won't paralyze him, lower the rank of this technique to a C-rank or a B-rank, it's not complicated enough to be an A-rank.

    (Genjutsu-shitsumei) illusion style- blindness
    Rank: S
    Type: Defence/offense
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: The user casts a unique illusion on the foe,messing with their chakra flow as well as their vision in the most natural way,making them think they have gone naturally blind suddenly and instantly. When used accurately,depending on the situation this illusion can possibly fool an MS user,as they would think that the blindness is as a result of over the usage of their MS and thus,has lost it's light but however,the target must already have the MS active for some turns and still in usage to believe this.
    -Lasts for two turn.
    -Ones per battle.
    -No S- ranked and above gen next turn.
    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
    Rip off of Bringer of Darkness technique which is a cannon.
     
         
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    ( Ninjutsu: Toho Supiritto Bakudan ) - Ninjutsu: Walking Spirit Bomb
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: F-Rank
    Range: Short - mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: The user after entering an opponents body via the spirit transformation technique, fills them with a gargantuan amount of chakra, nearly completely draining the users chakra levels, once this is done they flee the body returning to there own and ending the technique, the enormous amount of chakra passed to the opponent is offensive chakra reacting badly with the opponents own chakra and completely overloading there body causing an enormous explosion of chakra to occur once the user has left them, this almost completely drains the users chakra leaving them unable to move correctly or to use any powerful jutsu for the rest of the fight.
    Notes:
    *Can only be used by Dan Kato biographies.*
    *May only be used once*
    *The user can't use any A ranked jutsu or above for the rest of the match.*
    *Only usable by ReXii*
    ____________________________
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    This would defeat the purpose of the Spirit Transformation technique being restricted to only physical momvents control allowed when you enter the opponent's body, so i won't approve a technique that attacks him otherwise, the Spirit Transformation Technique is enough of an ability anyways.

    ( Taijutsu: Koushoku Senkou Sora Sumasshu ) - Taijutsu: Yellow Flash Sky Shatter
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: Minato Namikaze using his incredible speed and reflexes, is able to intercept a taijutsu attack aimed for the upper body, he pushes his body weight using both hands on the attacking limb, launching himself skywards whilst pushing his opponent down.
    Once airborne he twists his body rolling over and peforming a descending sky kick similar to the type used by Hashirama Senju and Tsunade Senju, lacking a large degree of the force, the speed factor more than makes up for the lack of power.
    Notes:
    *Can only be used by Minato Namikaze biographies.*
    *May only be used four times*
    *Only usable by ReXii*
    __________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    It's too similar to some of NB Taijutsu techniques, and speed cannot replace power, if Minato hits the ground with a kick directed to it with his speed as a boost it will have a lot of damage on him and very little damage done to the ground, unlike Tsunade who completely shatters the ground with her monstrous strength.

    EDITED on User's request by PM
     
         
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    (Kyokugen ni Shio Panchi) - Extreme Salt Punch
    Rank: C
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user gathers sweat into their hand, and uses chakra to evaporate the sweat until small salt crystals remain. The user will send a direct punch towards the target, shooting the salt crystals in that direction like like they were tiny bullets. The salt isn't able to penetrate through the body, but can pierce the skin due to the force. This can be done with any style of taijutsu attack which incorporates a punch.
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    I don't get the core of the technique, how would you use pure chakra to evaporate sweat? and how would evaporating sweat result in the formation of salt crystals? o_o , not to mention that Salt is attempted to be made into a CE, so this technique would collide with the CE concept when you use salt as an attack, not to mention that it's completely unrealistic, next time mention what the technique is exactly, because this can be mistaken as a ninjutsu and a taijutsu at the same time.
     
         
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    (Kuchiyose Gava) - Summoning Wind Crow Gava

    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: After making few handseals the user summons a giant and heavy crow named GAVA, who uses powerful wind attacks. he looks like a big Raven with white eyes, which is extremely powerful and battle type,he can use powerful attacks with his beak and his wings, it has sharp edge beak which is able to pass through the solid rock defenses also has very strong claws.user can ride on his back to use combos.he has got very fast speed and also has very loud noise which can be used to disturb/distract the opponent, he is able to fly high in the sky where opponent's jutsu's are unreachable but the same goes for him too, means his very own techniques wont be effected (wont cause damage to the opponent) from that range.

    - Can be summon trice a battle.
    - Can only use Wind jutsu and up to S rank.
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    Where should i even begin =_= , Ok you can start by removing every "powerful" and "very powerful" stuff out of the description, can he use the Wind techniques that require handseals as well or not, determine his size exactly, words like "Huge" or "Giant" is too broad, If he's capable of breaking through solid rock "earth" defenses or attacks it needs to be limited, up to what rank can he break through, and it would mean that it's an ability that will count as a move and also be restricted to a limited usage, make him summoned only once per battle, and put a turn limit that he stays on the field in, remove that flying high so the opponent's attacks wouldn't reach him completely, remove the "very fast" speed and "very loud" noise, it would require Sound release, and even if you had it i won't allow it after that beak ability.




    (Kuchiyose karasu Xee) - Summoning Illusion Crow Xee

    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:After making needed handseals, user summons a crow named XEE.He has crystal white eyes and full black body. As compare to boss Gava, he's a little small in size.He has double sized wings as compare to his body, that makes him move quickly and dodge many speedy and sudden attacks as well as gives him incredible speed.His specialty is using genjutsu, due to his speciality he's feared in crows as illusion master and Illusion sage. As having mastery over genjutsus and due to his fierce training in illusion arts, he finally possessed the same ability as Itachi, and can cast genjutsu by moving his body parts. (wings and beak etc)

    • Can only be summon once per battle.
    • User can't ride on him.
    • User can't use genjutsu techniques as long as summoning is in the battlefield/fighting (exception of summoning's genjutsu techniques).

    Abilities:

    • Can only cast genjutsu,can cast upto S rank.
    • Can cast genjutsu from long range.
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    I was having second thoughts whether or not to DNR it, after reading that whole "having the same ability of Itachi" thing, but i guess everyone deserves a chance, ok that ability you were talking about is actually related to his Sharingan, so take that out, take out the speed part and dodging techniques, restrict him to be able to use up to B-rank genjutsu and that's it, i won't allow him more than that, remove being able to cast genjutsu from long range, the range is determined with the genjutsu technique utilized and no way am i going to allow a long range genjutsu, that's an ability of NB genjutsu, make him only capable of using normal genjutsu techniques and nothing else, make him last 3 turns max on the field, i'll only give you one chance to make it approvable, after that it's a DNR, the links to the Itachi bio and the Summoning thread don't work, but i was easy going this time only after that i won't bother checking your techniques if you don't submit them properly.

    UchIha ItachI bio link = http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=200497
    Crow Summoning Thread = http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=229461

    Note - Edited the speedy part.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Demon Blood Chains
    Rank: A
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 30 to summon
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: a long chain made of a rare non-magnetic alloy discovered in the land of earth, created with blood and flesh from the Souma no Kou clan mixed into the metal. This 20 meter length of black and red chain being forged with the unique DNA of their clan allows SNK users to merge into the chain and travel through or hide inside it. The 2 ends of the chains are clamps allowing other weapons such as kunai or swords to be attached. Because it is not a fully organic material they are merging with it is more difficult on the user's body which restricts safely merging with this weapon in rapid succession, It however does not slow down the process in which merging happens and the user can merge/unmerge with the chain at the same speed as they would a living being.
    -Can only be used by Souma no Kou bios.
    -Chain is indestructible.
    -Only one user can be inside chain at once.
    -Users can only merge into chain once every three turns.
    -Can only merge into the chain 5 times per battle as well as unmerge 5 times.
    -Only used by Professor Sarutobi and those he allows.
    _______________________________
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    (Crocotta no Jutsu: Crocotta Shishou Shou) Hyena Technique: The Hyena Master's Call
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points: (+10 to Hyena Techniques)
    Description: The user channels chakra though their entire body and begins laughing, using this as a medium the user summons their chosen Hyena(s). Being summoned with this technique and hearing their master's laughter the Hyenas are more viscous and dedicated to their master then ever, with chakra coursing though their bodies the Hyena's techniques are all enhanced and their genjutsu gains one rank for their next use. The only Hyenas that can't be summoned by this technique are the Hyena King's personal servants P.E.A.
    -Twice per battle.
    -Can summon up to 2 Hyenas in one use
    -Only people who have signed the hyena contract can use.
    -Boost to Hyena techniques used by the user lasts 4 turns.
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    Core of the techniques makes no sense whatsoever, so your what giving an additional "motive" or whatever to your Hyena's that's why they gain strength? and the one rank boost in genjutsu? summoning without handseals nor a blood sacrifice? just no.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Katon: Fenikkusu no Mai - Fire Release: Dance of the Phoenix
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: short-long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user performs two hands seals and gathers up katon chakra into their hands and feet, the user then begins to break dance, while breaking dancing the user releases a continuous streams of fire from their hands and feet, the streams of fire make it difficult for the opponent to evade them due to the streams coming in different directions.
    Note:
    - Can only be taught by Kage Phoenix
    - Can only be used 5 times

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    Remove the colored, reduce the rank to B-rank, and rework the description, streams of fire require constant chakra release at the point of the fire release, how are you going to attempt that to every fire "stream" you release while your break dancing as well? if you replaced them with "balls" of fire or "orbs" that would've been a lot better, reduce the usage to 3 times.

    Katon: Haretsu Fenikkusu Shinzō - Fire Release: Bursting Phoenix Heart
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: short-long
    Chakra: 40 (+5)
    Damage: 80 (+5)
    Description: The user does several hand seals and gathers up katon chakra and then release a large ball of flames. The user can either decide to split the ball of fire into 1-4 balls of fire. The user then surrounds the opponent with balls of flames. The balls of flames can fire streams of fire at the opponent and chase the opponent. If the opponent lands a hit on any of the balls of flames they then burst releasing small flames at the opponent.
    Note:
    -Can only be taught by Kage Phoenix
    -If the opponent attack any of the flame balls with Water ninjutsu then the opponent takes no extra damage and the flame ball extinguishes
    -If the user is hit with an attack or is forced to defend himself from an oncoming attack, then the flame balls will all disappear
    - With the cost of 5 chakra points, the user can cause any of the flames to burst
    -If the flame balls are struck with fire ninjutsu it will have no effect
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    Katon: Fenikkusu Tamashī Bun Shū-ki - Fire Release: Phoenix Soul Divider
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user performs several hand seals and then leaps into the air. The user is then engulfed in largre flames that form a phoenix. The user then propels with fire from his feet while coated in flames in the shape of a phoenix towards the opponent. On nearing impact the user then discharges the flames from his body, causing the phoenix shaped flames to split into three large streams of flames that collide into the opponent from different directions at the same time. The first stream is coming from the sky, why the other two flames are closing in from the left and right.
    Note:
    -Only Kage Phoenix can use this technique
    -Can only be used three times
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    full body protection techniques won't be approved anymore, and it's similar to Hasashi's Mera Mera body technique, the engulfing in flames part, and how are you going to survive while there's a fire cloaking your body?
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Gaara View Post
    (Kyōka Suigetsu) ɸ Mirror Flower, Water Moon

    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A(+10 per Genjutsu)
    Description:
    The only decoration is the crossguard, which is a hexagon instead of a rectangle. The two sides parallel to the blade are long, whereas the four sides above and below the blade are shortened, making it into almost a diamond or prism-like shape. It has a green handle. This is aizen's normal weopan that he is in almost every single one of his battles.
    The name Kyōka Suigetsu hints at its illusionary properties; the moon reflected in water and a flower in a mirror are things that can be seen but not held. It is a Chinese saying for seeing and desiring something that is a dream that cannot be easily grasped in hand, teaching people about temptations.
    Abilities:
    -The blade acts as a medium for all genjutsu techs used by the user, much like uchiha use their eyes as a medium for genjutsu. The target however, must have made eye contact with the sword in order for this to work.
    -It gives a very small boost to kenjuts as it is very sharp and highly durable
    -It rejects foreign chakra that tries to enter the weilders body
    Restrictions:
    -Must be holding the blade for any of the abilities to work
    -Can only act as a medium for genjutsu once per turn
    -Must have Genjutsu MASTERED to wield

    ||Declined|| The above are not true restrictions.

    (Eru Esukūdo)- El Escudo
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    The technique allows for the creation of a light green, hexagonal barrier that is normally fixed to one central area and, when inactive, remains invisible. Once this technique is used, it can stay invisible until an attack hit it. Upon contact with an outside force, the barrier enlarges to fully to protect whatever it is affixed to. The barrier protects from the attack keeping it away from the target, gathers the energy in one area, then it momentarily absorbs the energy from the attack and then forces the attack outward away from the shield in effect, dispersing the attack altogether. It is powerful enough to block a point-blank attack with a rasengan. This technique, once activated stays invisible until a attack heads towards it. The user must state where the central point is. This can only be used twice per battle and once at a time. Only defends up to an A-rank technique and most Tai-Ken.

    ||Declined|| Define "center point." Can you make the barrier anywhere you want (which is exploitable)? If it's a center point on the user's body, then this is good to go.
    (Eru Esukūdo)- El Escudo
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    The technique allows for the creation of a light green, hexagonal barrier that is normally fixed to one central area and, when inactive, remains invisible. Once this technique is used, it can stay invisible until an attack hit it. Upon contact with an outside force, the barrier enlarges to fully to protect whatever it is affixed to. The barrier protects from the attack keeping it away from the target, gathers the energy in one area, then it momentarily absorbs the energy from the attack and then forces the attack outward away from the shield in effect, dispersing the attack altogether. It is powerful enough to block a point-blank attack with a rasengan. This technique, once activated stays invisible until a attack heads towards it. The user must state where the central point around the body. This can only be used twice per battle and once at a time. Only defends up to an A-rank technique and most Tai-Ken.

    ||Approved||
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Katon :akuma kyuutai )Fire Style -Demon Orb
    Type: Offensive/Denfensive
    Rank: B Rank
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra: 20 Chakra
    Damage: 40 Damage
    Description: The user releases chakra then creates an orb of chakara around their self useing the sun enegry to power the jutsu to burn their oppenet.
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    An orb of fire around you can kill you, and you can't use the sun's power on a fire technique, it has been done before by Zanji, called Solar Flare technique, i don't get how an orb of fire that's made around you will burn your opponent, does it expand to Mid range? o_o rework the whole description.

    P.s : srry first custom jutsu try
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Technique: Herupā
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will draw blood, perform a line of several handseals then he or she will thrust their arm downwards and Herupā The Servant will appear. Herupā meaning helper is a weak red cardinal from Aries. He has a black bill, black face and a vibrant red/pink body like most male cardinals. He can fly at speeds up to 30 mph. He is ruffly the size of your average adult parrot meaning he is the smallest in Aries. Herupā can speak perfect english and can sense chakra in a short range of him and his summoner whether it be underground or in the air. As soon as Herupā is summoned he begins to save up his chakra. Once per battle, Herupā can also release all of his saved chakra and disturb any genjutsu that may have been casted upon the summoner. After this is done, he poofs away.
    *Must have signed Red Cardinal Contract
    *Can only be summoned twice
    *The genjutsu can disturb up to A-Rank genjutsu if kept on the field for more than 3 turns
    *The genjutsu technique cost an additional 60 chakra from her summoner plus it counts as a move
    *Summoning him counts as a move also
    *The summoner will be dizzy after she is dispersed
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    Genjutsu: Serufu horobi no kōdo|Illusionary Art: Code of Self Damnation
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will release his/her chakra into a target of his or her choice. After, the user takes control of the target's vision and hearing. The user will project images of bright flashing numbers and letters followed by high pitched screeching noise. A sharp headache and dizziness are the effects of the flashing numbers and letters. It is flashing at speeds of 7 fps which can easily induced the mentioned effects. The letters and numbers also contain subliminal messages such as "Death awaits" and "You're weak". This can break the opponents will to fight if the genjutsu is kept in effect for a long period of time.
    *Can only be taught by Shade Dracova
    *Can only be used 3 times
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    It needs a medium to trigger the genjutsu, like handseals, light, sound etc, sound mediums being restricted to sound release users, remove the colored parts and reduce it's rank to B-rank.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Updating 3 already approved techniquies of mine.

    Link to Approval in the Old CJ Thread!

    Quote Originally Posted by Akisha View Post
    Lightning Release Rai Whip (Raiton: Rai Kakuhan)
    Rank: S
    Type: Offense
    Range: Short-Middle
    Chackra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description The user will preform a single hand seal and concentrate a huge amount of compressed chakra in his palm. As a result a very long whip will aprear and by concentrating raiton chakra the user is able to extend it up to 10m. The whip is attached to the user's hand by little steams of lighting which allows the user to control the whip and send him wherever he wants. The jutsu will numb its target upon contact, however the user is very vulnerable to water attacks while using this jutsu...

    * Can only be taught by PowerOfDarkness
    * Can only be used 2 times per battle
    * No S rank Raiton techniques for the same and following 1 turn.
    (Raiton: Rai Kakuhan) Lightning Release Lightning Whip
    Rank: A
    Type: Offense
    Range: Short-Long
    Chackra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description By concentrating Raiton chakra and using shape manipulation, the user is able to fire Lightning Whips from his hands or from an already existing Lightning Source. The whips serve different purposes, the most common being to restrict a target from moving. Once in contact with the target they will release non focused electricity that will numb and paralyze the opponent. The whips can shot from an already existing lightning like lightning in the clouds or from the user’s own ration technique in order to try and capture the opponent while the attack is coming at them for example.
    ~The technique can only be taught by Akisha and can only be used 2 times per battle, and the user must wait 1 turn before re-using it again. The technique can’t be used from an opponent’s lightning technique and can’t be used from Forbidden Ranked Techniques.



    Link to Approval in the Old CJ Thread!

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    Water Release: Sea Wave (Suiton: Umi Nami)
    Rank: A
    Type: Offense/Deffense
    Range: short-middle
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 40 (If used in conjuction with lighting - 60)
    Description: The user releases his water chakra, creating a wave with height 5 meters. Then the user can decide whether he is going to use it for deffense or send it against the enemy. When send against the enemy the wave travels realy fast so it could be used almost imediatly after the previous jutsu. The damage increases if it's used in conjuction with lighting.
    Note: Can only be taught by PowerOfDarkness.
    Note Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    Note: No water jutsu for the next turn.
    (Suiton: Umi Nami no Kujo) Water Release: Sea Wave of Destruction
    Rank: S
    Type: Offense/Deffense
    Range: All
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user releases his water chakra into the air, materializing a wave with height of 10 meters.The wave can be used to block incoming attacks or either be sent at the opponent at very fast rate. The wave, upon making contact with something like a wall or another mean of defense, splashes and becomes a small water source that immediately starts sending bullets of water at the opponent . The damage increases if it's used in conjuction with lighting.
    ~The technique can only be taught by Akisha and can only be used 2 times per battle. The user must wait 1 turn before re-using. No Water techniques above S rank for 2 turns after using this technique.



    Link to Approval in the Old CJ Thread!

    Quote Originally Posted by Akisha View Post
    Earth Release: Explosing Rocks (Doton: Bakuhatsuteki Iwa)
    Rank: B
    Type: Offense
    Range: middle - long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user molds his Earth Chakra in his hands. Then he slaps his hands on the ground releasing the chakra he has molded and puts 2 explosive tags on the ground. As a result 2 large rocks are formed, taking the 2 explosive tags inside them. Then the user can send the rocks against the enemy. After the rocks come closer to the enemy the explosing tag inside the rock explode and doing some damage to the enemy.
    Note: Can only be taught by PowerOfDarkness*
    (Doton: Ame no Iwa) Earth Release: Raining Rocks
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offense
    Range: All
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 90
    Description: The user claps his hands while releasing large amount of Doton chakra in the ground. By using shape manipulation, the user rises, a huge sphere of earth with the size of a Summoning. The sphere has extreme amounts of chakra in it but can’t be used to be dropped down the enemy. Instead, while in mid air the Sphere destroys itself and as a result huge chakra influenced boulders begin to rain down the opponent, leaving small crates where they fall.
    ~This technique can only be taught by Akisha and can only be used once per battle. The user will take 20 damage from it and his reaction time will be decreased for 2 turns due to the fact he is very tired of the huge chakra he had to use. The user can not use Doton techniques for the following turn and as well as any other Forbidden ranked techniques for the same and following turn.
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    the first one can't be reduced in rank, the last one is simply oped and unreasonable and the 2nd one is the same as many water techniques already made.
     
         
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