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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Link for the weapon's approval: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...05#post8989105

    Art of the Jade Warp: Elctrical Elemination - Tamamayu no Jutsu: Raikou Shoukyo

    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack\Supplementary\Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90
    Description: While using Jade Warp, the user put all of his power and concentration into sending the wires in the form of the third/last quarter of the moon's phrases, as he do that, he channel his lightning chakra through the wires making them become electrical. this technique covers the same size as Fire release: Great Fire Majestic Annihilation with a similar shape made of hundreds of electrical strings capable of wiping out all the targets that stands before the its user, however, once this jutsu is used most of the wires of the Jade Warp wires making it nothing more than a gauntlet with no special powers.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Must have the Jade Warp on and mastered lightning element.
    -Once used, the user can no longer use the Jade Warp techniques or ability or lightning element in the next two round.
    -This technique look somewhat like the upper part of this manga page:


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    I like the technique, but covering a radius similar to the Great Fire Majestic Annihilation is too much, reduce that, and forbidden ranked techniques require physical drawbacks, like decreased speed, movement puts a huge strain on your body, reduced handseals speed, etc those along with the ones that you have, remove the "wiping all the targets that stand before the user stuff".


    Art of the Jade Warp: Hyperlink - Tamamayu no Jutsu: Chourenketsushi
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary\Attack
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: A quick dodging technique where the user send a lightning chakra infused wires that makes contract with the ground or a reliable object at great speed thanks to the lightning chakra and make them sting into it. After that, the user pull himself toward it using his high body strength which result a fast escape from fast techniques that the user may face. This technique can also be used to attack the enemy and drag them to the user and causing his/her body to be paralyze by the lightning.
    -Can only be used through the Jade Warp.
    -Only usable twice per battle.
    -Require the user to know up to A rank lightning element to use it.
    -This technique looks somewhat like the last part of this manga page:

    And how it could be offensive in this:

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    All i'm seeing is "great speed", "fast escape", "great speed" those terms are vague and i won't allow that so remove them, i'm fine with you having the technique stick to something solid then retract yourself to it, that should happen by retracting the wires to the gauntlet not with your "high upper body strength", but remove the attacking part of the technique, how is this going to allow you a quick dodge when it's threads that extend from the gaunlet at another place and pulls you towards it, the technique itself is slow.


    Art of the Jade Warp: Fabric Sewer - Tamamayu no Jutsu: Tanmono Koukyo
    Rank: A
    Type: Differensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short – Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A(+10 to taijutsu if used to make long sleeves)
    Description: Using Tamamayu, The user manipulate the strings into sewing into each other taking the shape of either a shield of fabric that bends itself against the ground with as strong as the jutsu is was to take the shape of a ball around the user to maintain a perfect protection against that attack. Or the shape of monk's sleeves around the user's arms. The sleeves are baggy and long but maintain a hole in each of them where the user's hands pop out, those sleeves can be used in taijutsu and works perfect against thrown objects.
    -Can only be used thrice.
    -If used to make sleeves, they will only remain for two turns.
    -The shield can only defend against up to B rank elemental techniques and A rank ninjutsu/taijutsu techniques.
    -The sleeves can only extend to mid range.
    -The lower part of this manga page explaining how it work as a shield:

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    What is this? a shield that protects you, or form a ball around you? forming a 360 degrees defense has been done countless times so i'm not going to allow that, if it's a shield that can be made to either one of the angles around you then ok, but not all of them, i mean like in front of you, above, below etc, remove that whole sleeves of a monk thing, it makes no sense and should be made into another technique separately, right now this is 2 techniques crammed into one, also why is this Mid ranged? o_o make it Short ranged.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Suiton: Mizu seiun) - Water Release : Water Nebula
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: After concentrating their chakra into the water and doing the handseals: Ram → Tiger → Boar, the user creates two columns of water, which rotate around each other and forms a helix that pushes the opponent with huge force, causing massive damage.

    Notes:
    - Water source is required
    - Can only hit a single opponent
    - Can only be use 3 times in a battle
    - Can only be taught by Ouacus
    Picture of jutsu:

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    Where are the columns of water made exactly, the opposite sides of the opponent's direction? in front of the opponent? you have to specify that exactly in the technique's description itself, also remove that "huge force" thing.


    (Futon: Eariaru Fōze ) - Wind Release : Aerial Phose
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: After doing the Hare → Dog handseals, swinging both of his/her hands in a circular motion around himself/herself, they then release a sphere of wind which starts from around their body and tears apart surrounding obstacles and damages the opponents which are within range. Its also blows away any incoming projectiles and weaker jutsu.

    Notes:
    - Can only be use 3 times in a battle
    - Can only be taught by Ouacus
    Picture of jutsu:

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    Similar to cannon techniques, like the "Wind Release: Peacock Whirlwind Formation" and the "Wind Release: Wind Sickle Armor", also 360 degrees protection like techniques won't be approved anymore.


    (Futon: Tenchi Bankai) - Wind Release : Spinning Dist of Heaven and Earth
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: 30
    Description: COncentrating their chakra into either hand, the user will slam his/her hand onto the ground sending their chakra out of their hand. A pillar of their chakra will then rise up into the sky, clearing it up if there are clouds. Because of that, Any form of weather which comes from clouds is momentarily stopped while the clouds form once again.

    Notes:
    - The weather change lasts for 4 turns
    - Can only be use 3 times in a battle
    - Can only be taught by Ouacus
    - It can also be used with a weapon instead of the user's hand
    Picture of jutsu:
    [IMG]http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100624130636/dgrayman/images/1/10/Wood_seal.png
    The pillar is not red though[/IMG]

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    I get what your trying to do, but it can't be done like that, someone could just overpower your technique making the clouds gather again, it's short ranged, meaning it extends 5 meters yet you say it rises to the sky? you can't keep the whether changed for 4 turns, i don't get why is this technique required when you can just shoot wind at the clouds and blow them away with the wind, there's no need for this.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 06:00 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Futon: Soyokaze Suteppu) - Wind Release: Zephyr Step
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: -
    Description: This technique is in a similar respect to the Peacock Whirlwind Formation technique. The user constantly expels wind chakra from their body, creating a current of wind which revolves around them. The purpose of the technique is to give the user extra maneuverability so they can become more agile with their movements, allowing them to swiftly move around people, small projectiles and "pillar based" techniques like tornadoes. If used on a person, the velocity of the current can knock them off their feet.
    Notes:
    - Can only be used five times a match.

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    Even though it's a rip off of a cannon technique, the one you mentioned i like it, but needs more explanation, the way it is now means that it's a wind sphere made around you that just aides in your maneuverability, i don't allow 360 degree defenses so that has to be changed, i know that's not the reason you want this technique for, but still it has to be taken into account, the description of the technique itself has to clearly mention all it's effects, mention that it doesn't boost your speed in anyway.


    replacing CW found here

    (Serēnogurōbu) - Sereno Gloves
    Rank: B
    Type: Weapon
    Range: -
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: - (+15)
    Description: Otherwise known as Unbreakable Fists, the Sereno Gloves are a special brand of gauntlet worn by the user. The backs of the gloves are lined with a chakra-reactive metal, mostly used to defend against blades and other weapons. The chakra reactive metal is used to reinforce the gloves to strengthen them, which is why they are considered unbreakable. The strengthening could be compared to the high-speed healing of a medical ninja, constantly reinforcing the gloves with chakra. Another feature is that the gloves hold is that they have special apparatuses which resemble boosters. The user can channel chakra into these boosters so that for a split second, they can amplify the speed of one's punches, increasing the rank of punching techniques by one rank when used.

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    So this boosts "punching techniques" with 1 rank, +15 isn't 1 rank increase, +20 is, you should either keep the +15 and remove the 1 rank boost, or just remove that damage boost and leave the 1 rank increase, and state that it boosts Taijutsu techniques that uses your hands, punching techniques is vague, mention that the speed boost of the punches can be tracked by normal eyes and reacted to as well, other than that there's nothing wrong with it.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-07-2013 at 06:10 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Ninja Art:Nail Storm(Ninjutsu:Tsume No Arashi
    Type:Attack
    Rank:E
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:5
    Damage:10
    Description:The user will simply perform the dragon hand symbol then open their mouth releasing chakra in the shape of sharp nails.
    Notes/Restrictions
    ~Can deflect normal thrown weapons
    ~Can cut but only a maximum of an inch
    ~Can only be taught by Sonnelion
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    Similar to the cannon techniques of Hidden Needles, and Nail mist pierce.


    Ninja Art:Nightmare Tecknique(Ninjutsu:Akumu No Jutsu)
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:E
    Range:Short
    Chakra:5
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user will perform the dog handseal then clap hands together as they do this 3 demon like figures will appear with weapons that will charge at the enemy once in front of the enemy it they will poof creating a distraction and blocking view of opponent.
    Restrictions/Notes
    ~Lasts for one turn
    ~Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    ~Can only be used once per battle phase
    ~Require 1 turn breaks
    What they look like.



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    What are the demons made of exactly, pure chakra? or are they simply illusions, i gotta be honest with you though, there are genjutsu techniques that can do what this technique does exactly and even better, like the flower petal escape technique for example.
    Resubmitting
    B]Ninja Art:Nightmare Technique(Ninjutsu:Akumu No Jutsu)[/B]
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:E
    Range:Short
    Chakra:5
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user will perform the dog handseal then clap hands together as they do this 3 demon like figures will appear composed of chakra like an illusionary clone, with weapons that will charge the opponent poofing as soon as they get close to the opponent blocking their view with black and gray smoke blocking the opponents view allowing the user to attack.
    Restrictions/Notes
    ~Lasts for one turn
    ~Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    ~Can only be used once per battle phase
    ~Sharingan and Byakugan users are capable of seeing the opponent.
    ~Require 1 turn breaks
    What they look like.



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    Added a note and edited the description slightly.


    Ninja Art:Evil Transformation(Ninjutsu:Aku No Henkan)
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:E
    Range: Short
    Chakra:5
    Damage:10
    Description:The user will perform the tiger hand seal then clap their hands together following as this is done chakra will be sprout from all over their body hardening within seconds to form a black and white shield around them.
    Restrictions/Notes
    -Can only be used twice
    -Can only be taught by Sonnelion
    -Lasts 2 turns
    Abilities
    -Boosts the users speed by half their normal speed
    -+5 to attacks
    -Deflects/Protects against thrown projectiles(Normal)

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    ._. +5 to attacks? speed being boosted? what? there's no valid reason for the things your mentioning, just because what your gathering chakra? don't resubmit


    Heaven/Hell's Call(Ten Ka Jigoku No Yobidashi
    Rank: C
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: NA(+15 When ability Active)
    Damage points: 30(+5 When ability active)
    Description:They are a pair of similar claw type of weapons that are made of chakra metal,steel,and iron making them incredibly strong.Hell's call is a gauntlet that runs the length of the user's forearm and is covered in skulls and has the ability to heat up,once chakra is imbued,and set ablaze with 3 oot blades except for the middle one which is 3"4" inches long that once imbued it can extend it's blades to 4 feet.
    Heaven's Call is a golden gauntlet that runs the length of the user's arm with a jewel in the center that the user can channel chakra into it and blood red eye at the bottom will create a shield and glows a white color when activated and the claws can fire off at the opponent at an incredible speed,nearly invisible to the human eye,that can be imbued with chakra as well giving it the ability to shock the opponent if it comes in contact with the opponent.The gauntlet will be covered with lightning when imbued.


    Restrictions
    -Imbuing can be used as long as the user has enough chakra
    -Shield can only be used twice
    -Can be used at the same time
    -Imbuing lasts for one battle phase
    -Shield lasts as one of the users turns per battle phase
    -Heaven's Call can launch the claws as long as the user has chakra.(+4 to chakra cost to launch claws)
    Notes
    -Must summon from a scroll kept on the user
    -Must mention in bio if you have permission to use
    -Can only be used by/get permission from Sonnelion
    -Costs 2 chakra to summon it from scroll
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    the claws are a bit big for a small claw type weapon like that, remove being nearly invisible to the naked eye, define that "incredible" speed that the claws can travel at, give the firing claws a rank and a usage limit, also the shield, where can it be made exactly? in front of you? around you? i won't allow 360 degrees shield protection, techniques like that have been done constantly, also give the shielding ability a rank and a usage limit, is the gauntlet itself gets hot or just the claws? because of it's the gauntlet then your going to burn your arm.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    The Power Pole
    Type:Weapon
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:40 on activation, -5 per turn
    Damage:N/A -5 to the user when it is activated
    Description:The power pole is a red staff made of wood from a strange tree. The tree was infused with the chakra of a dying man, absorbing his life force and chakra as well. The staff is blood red in color, and feasts on the user's blood whenver one of it's main abilites is used as a sacrifice and when it is intially activated. (5 damage to the user). The material the staff is made of is unbreakable by normal means, the user can use it as many times as possible without the wood tarnishing in anyway. It is also quite flexible, and can bend very easily. The staff's real ability however is in it's ability to harness katon chakra. The sword does not simply channel and boost katon chakra, it eats flames. The staff however cannot eat natural katon chakra not produced by fire. It can eat only up to B rank flames. The staff can absorb and re direct the flames making them even stronger (increase by one rank). The staff can also be extended at will, but like every other ability it holds, it requires a blood sacrifice (5 damage to the user). It can extend to long range when the user yells "Power Pole Extend!", surprising the opponent. It extends at speeds twice that of a thrown kunai.

    ~Restrictions~

    -Requires a blood sacrifice for every time it's abilites are used.-
    -can only be used for a duration of 4 turns-
    -Can only absorb fire jutsu 3 times-
    -Can only extend thrice per battle-
    -If anyone other than PresidentBush tried to wield this staff, then it would automatically go into a feeding frenzy as soon as that person touched it, drinking all their blood uncontrollably. That is unless PresidentBush himself gave the person permission.-
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    Sorry no elemental boosting or absorping CWs are allowed anymore, too many have been done already, also you speak about a staff and half way in the description you mention a sword lol.


    Katon Yo Mama!
    Type:Defense
    Rank:B
    Range:Short
    Chakra:20
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user will first pull out a scroll, and concentrate katon chakra into it. An image of an average looking mother would then appear. The opponent should then recoil in shock at seeing someone's mother. This would give the user time to attack the opponent.

    Restrictions

    -Usable once-
    -Taught only by PB-
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    Why would your opponent recoil in shock when seeing someone's mother? core of the technique doesn't make any sense, it can't even be done by genjutsu, just Sharingan genjutsu can force your opponent to do something and custom Sharingan genjutsu are banned.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Samontekunikku: Barusa no Rioneru· messhi)Summon technique: Lionel Messi of the Catalans
    Type: Offensive and defensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Lionel Messi is a male binturong and the boss king of the other summons. He weighs 100 kilograms and is 7.00 feet in height at full stance, due to him being a binturong a specie which lives in the forest and climb high trees] he is good at jumping and is able to jump more than 20 feet into the air. He has rough scaly barks which enable him to defend against [a rank] jutsu and below. He carries 7 katana with him on his back along with several ninja tools. He is capable of using Wind [without hand seals] And Lightning. He has also mastered ninjutsu and is able to perform the basics up to his rank.[Rasengan and shadow clone] Due to his body appearance he is able to hide himself in the battle field and blend in easily , but can easily be located by any sensor or dojutsu, he is capable of carrying a maximum of two people on his bark due to his high level of endurance, he is able to speak English and can communicate with his summoner and other summons telepathically. He is normally summoned as a last resort by the user or when his life is in danger.
    Note: Last for 4 turns
    Note: Must have learnt jutsu to use.
    Note: Defending against jutsu count as 1 move.
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    OP, can block A-rank jutsu of anything? too much man i won't even allow him to be impervious to 1 elemental techniques of A-rank and below, choose only one element, not 2 and mention up to what rank can he use and does it include the ones that require handseals as well, remove the ninjutsu and speed reference, remove hiding and blending, remove the telepathic ability, mention that he's only summoned once, dunno how he would be able to wield those swords but ok ._. and lol Lionel Messi as a summon, i'm guessing he wouldn't like that very much


    (Chikyū no sutairu: Dōro-bashi)Earth style: Road Bridge
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs the rat and dog hand seals and then slams his two palms unto the ground bringing forth a long narrow road made of earth which uproots from the ground and extends up to long range from the user default position [short range], the road can extend to as much as 40 meters long and can be created anywhere on the terrain, it also can be destroyed by the user at any point in time.
    Note: Can be done twice in a battle
    Note: Last for two turns
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    Similar to a cannon technique called tunneling technique, and a CJ made long ago by Faith.


    Quote Originally Posted by Thunderbolt View Post
    Mākā:Marker
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Marker is a tall sword made of titanium,which weighs around 14-20 Kilogram , it has a golden handle which the user holds to wield the sword during battle. The sword is quite long and about 6 feet in height and cannot be broken or shattered by the opponent. It has a unique power of marking its targets. In short, when hit or struck at successful at the opponent ,the sword marks the opponent and copies it chakra signature making it unable for the user to hide in the battle field. The sword provides some offensive means to and when swung can create blast of wind [A rank] which he uses to deflect against kunais and enemy opponent.

    Note:The sword Lasts for three turns.
    Notene Blast counts as a move in one turn.
    Notenly thunderbolt can wield the sword.

    Removed the slash and made it more realistic.

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    Swords that produce elemental blasts have been done countless times before. If this is a CW why does it only last 3 turns? if it only lasts that long, whats its use? Its a pointless sword.
    Mākā:Marker
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:Marker is a tall sword made of titanium,which weighs around 14-20 Kilogram , it has a golden handle which the user holds to wield the sword during battle. The sword is quite long and about 6 feet in height and cannot be broken or shattered by the opponent. It has a unique power of marking its targets. In short, when hit or struck at successful at the opponent ,the sword marks the opponent and copies it chakra signature making it unable for the user to hide in the battle field. The sword has great strenght and can be used to cut earth -based jutsu [A rank and below]

    Note:The sword Lasts for five turns.
    Notenly thunderbolt can wield the sword.
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    Why didn't you bold the changes about "cutting earth based jutsu of A-rank"? that could be taken as an action to trick us, you are supposed to bold all the changes and you didn't, Anyway i'm letting it go this time, remove being made from titanium, it's a CE that's made by -Mugen- and i'm against having it as material of your CW, cutting through techniques has been done constantly before, Copies the opponent's chakra signature? o_o sensing ability? remove that, basically the whole description needs to be worked.


    I made all the edits, i increased it turns and i removed all those gibberish about elemental blasts. Thanks.

    Summon Approval Link:http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post8869053
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Raiton: Raikou Taka Genkotsu | Lightning Release: Lightning Hawk Fist
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 50
    Description: The user channels a large amount of lightning around one of his fists. The manipulated lightning takes the shape of a small hawk with wings. It can be used to jab & cut your opponent if in close combat or it can be fired as a projectile.

    Note: Can only be used twice per match
    Note: Can only taught by Danzo Auditore De Firenze
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    Incorrect damage info, it should be "60" for A-rank not "50", define the exact size of the hawk.


    (Raiton Daikin Nami) – Lightning Release: Electropositive Surge
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A (-30 against the user)
    Description: The user will channel their raiton chakra through out their chakra system and release it into an intense electropositive surge around their body. The surge damages the user and gives them a strong electropositive charge. This electropositive charge means any A-Rank or lower Lightning jutsu directed towards the user will be immediately repelled due to the user’s charge being the same as the incoming attack. Incoming raiton attacks simply choose another trajectory away from the user and aren’t actually neutralized by this jutsu.

    Note: Polarization lasts for two turns
    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Can only be Taught by Danzo Auditore De Firenze
    Note: No other Raiton jutsu in the same in the same turn its used
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    This is a rip off of Nagashi with adding the positive charge, so it won't be approved.


    (Raiton Taizen Boufuu) – Lightning Release: Calm Storm
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user focuses their chakra into materializing lightning which is extremely high energy instead of focusing on its penetrative nature. This high energy Lightning is then formed into a condensed ball between the user’s palms and released into rotating stream of lightning which resembles a stream of fire in shape. Due to the high amount of energy in the lighting, it will send a massive amount of energy through the opponent’s nervous system on contact, causing severe upper body paralysis for one turn (this is from the waist upwards). The Lightning is so high energy it can be used to demagnetize metals. However, due to focusing on its energy level rather than penetrative abilities, this lightning loses its strength against Earth and becomes neutral.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle
    Note: No Lighting Jutsu in the next turn
    Note: Can only be taught by Danzo Auditore De Firenze
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    Lightning doesn't materialize, it's released either from your body, the ground or the sky by the clouds, the way this is is lightning released from your hands to form a condensed ball, then released as a stream towards the opponent or a "cannon" and i have a very similar technique called the "Lightning Release: Lightning Cannon".
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 10:56 AM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Mokuton: itsutsu yubi doragon) Wood Release: Five Fingered Dragon
    Type:Attack/Supplementary/Defense
    Rank:S
    Range:Short - Mid
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:
    The user will first submerge there hand into the ground. Then the user will grow a huge hand made of wood. The hand stands about 10 meters tall. The hand can be grown anywhere up to mid range. Instead of having fingers the hand has five dragon heads. Each head can be fully controlled by the user.

    - No wood above A rank next two turns.
    -Usable twice a battle
    -Can only be taught by Bloo


    Looks only just in wood.



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    Already exists.


    (Mokuton: Hishou Moku kinchou ) Wood Release: Flight of the Wood Birds
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short - Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Description:
    The user will first perform one handseal and hold there hand out, palm facing outwards. The user will then create and shoot out of there hand up to four birds. Depending on the amount of birds released the size will vary. One bird will have a four meter wing span. Two birds will have a three meter wingspan. Three birds will have two meter wing span. Four birds will have a one meter wing span. The user has full control of there flight patterns as long as its not overly complicated ( i.e loops, barrel rolls, etc.)

    -No A rank and above wood next turn.
    -Usable three times a battle.
    -Can only be taught by Bloo.
    ______________________________
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    Do these birds stay active? if so they need a chakra cost per turn to maintain. Also, what do they do btw? You produce them...then what?

    Updating this

    I gained ownership of the contract here

    Quote Originally Posted by Lokí View Post
    (Kuchiyose: gosai fi-to bu-bi) Summoning: Red Footed Booby
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his finger and with use of the blood performs one hand seal (Bird) and hitting the ground summoning One of the many Booby birds, The Red-footed Booby is the size of the Hawk summon owned by sasuke. It has red legs, and its bill and throat pouch are coloured pink and blue, and the flight feathers are black. When young it was brownish with darker wings, and pale pinkish legs. By training in the Bird land with the Blue Footed Booby and its Boss The Red footed has learned to use Fire Techiques however only up to B rank since it isnt as strong as its Boss but can use them without need of handseals due to the hard training it had in his land. It can carry one people, He can also speak English and has a great bond with the contract holder due to the time they spent together. He listens to any orders even when risking his life knowing his contract holder will never put him in danger. He can obiously fly.

    Notes:

    -Can only be summoned for 5-turns
    -Can only carry 1 person on his back
    -All of his moves count towards the users 3 moves per turn
    -Can be summoned even if there are other Booby bird on the Field, aslong as The Boss isnt. (Blue footed Booby)
    -Must be a signer or the Holder of the Booby Bird contract to summon.
    Looks:
    (Kuchiyose: gosai fi-to bu-bi) Summoning: Red Footed Booby
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his finger and with use of the blood performs one hand seal (Bird) to summon one of the many Booby birds, The Red-footed Booby is the size of the Hawk summon owned by sasuke. It has red legs, and its bill and throat pouch are coloured pink and blue, and the flight feathers are black. When young it was brownish with darker wings, and pale pinkish legs. By training in the Bird land with the Blue Footed Booby and its Boss The Red footed has learned to use Fire Techiques up to A rank and without need of handseals due to the hard training it had in his land. It can carry one people, He can also speak English and can speak to the contract holder and any signer telepathicly. He listens to any orders even when risking his life knowing his contract holder will never put him in danger. He can obiously fly.

    Notes:

    -Can only be summoned for 4-turns
    -Can only carry 1 person on his back
    -All of his moves count towards the users 3 moves per turn
    -Can be summoned even if there are other Booby bird on the Field, aslong as The Boss isnt. (Blue footed Booby)
    -Must be a signer or the Holder of the Booby Bird contract to summon.
    Looks:

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    I'm ok with everything except the telepathic ability, so remove that.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by -Severus Snape- View Post
    ~Resubmitting

    (Genjutsu: Sourubyū) | Illusionary Arts: Soul View
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user preforms a string of 3 handseals and release a burst of chakra towards the opponent(s), placing them under a genjutsu. As soon as the users chakra interferes with the opponent's chakra flow, the opponent will have the feeling that he leaves his body, and starts flowing towards the sky. As the opponent 'floats' in the sky he sees his body on the ground in a frozen stance, and vulnerable to attacks. In reality, the opponent stands immobilised on his place.
    Note: Can be used once
    Note: Lasts two turns
    Note: No Genjutsu in the same
    Note: Can affect multiple targets
    ||Declined|| Remove the bolded.

    ~Submitting
    (Hātoburēkā) | Heartbreaker
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Heartbreaker is a sword that belonged to legendary Davy Jones at one point and is Jack’s greatest weapon. Heartbraker is an indestructible sword, made by the Sea Goddess Calypso, and was given Davy Jones as a sign of her love for him. After Jones’ dead, the sword got lost, until a young ninja found the sword hidden in the sand on a deserted beach. For a long period of time the ninja used the sword as a regular sword until one day he channelled his chakra into the sword, and the sword changed into a metal whip. Upon practicing the young ninja found out that he could channel his chakra trough the sword, and use it for his own personal fighting style, Hoippu Geijutsu.
    Hearbreaker is in it’s sword form a simple double handed sword, with a blade that is 4 feet long. Because of the special metal that is used to make Heartbraker, it is very light and the user will be able to wield it both with one or with two hands as he desires. The metal has another special property, it conducts chakra.
    In it’s whip form, Heartbraker’s blade will split up in small fragments that create whip of 8 meters long. The segments are hold together by small strings of metal.
    Restrictions:
    - Can only be wielded by -Severus Snape-
    - Changing Heartbreaker’s form counts as one move

    Sword form


    Whip form


    ||Declined|| Conducts chakra? What is Hoippu Genjutsu
    ~Resubmitting

    (Genjutsu: Sourubyū) | Illusionary Arts: Soul View
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user preforms a string of 3 handseals and release a burst of chakra towards the opponent(s), placing them under a genjutsu. As soon as the users chakra interferes with the opponent's chakra flow, the opponent will have the feeling that he leaves his body, and starts flowing towards the sky. As the opponent 'floats' in the sky he sees his body on the ground in a frozen stance, and vulnerable to attacks. In reality, the opponent stands immobilised on his place.
    Note: Can be used once
    Note: No Genjutsu in the same
    Note: Can affect multiple targets

    ______________
    ±± Declined ±±
    Incorrect chakra info. This should also be B-Rank.

    (Hātoburēkā) | Heartbreaker
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Heartbreaker is a sword that belonged to legendary Davy Jones at one point and is Jack’s greatest weapon. Heartbraker is an indestructible sword, made by the Sea Goddess Calypso, and was given Davy Jones as a sign of her love for him. After Jones’ dead, the sword got lost, until a young ninja found the sword hidden in the sand on a deserted beach. For a long period of time the ninja used the sword as a regular sword until one day he channelled his chakra into the sword, and the sword changed into a metal whip. Upon practicing the young ninja found out that he could channel his chakra trough the sword, and use it for his own personal fighting style, Hoippu Geijutsu.
    Hearbreaker is in it’s sword form a simple double handed sword, with a blade that is 4 feet long. Because of the special metal that is used to make Heartbraker, it is very light and the user will be able to wield it both with one or with two hands as he desires. The metal has another special property, it conducts chakra once chakra is channelled into Heartbraker.
    In it’s whip form, Heartbraker’s blade will split up in small fragments that create whip of 8 meters long. The segments are hold together by small strings of metal.
    Restrictions:
    - Can only be wielded by -Severus Snape-

    Sword form


    Whip form

    Link to CFS, Hoippu Geijutsu

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    ±± Approved ±±



    (Katon: Shinseina hai) | Fire Release: Sacred Ashes

    Type: Supplemtary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: After performing a single handseal, the user gathers his chakra in his mouth, and will spit out a large amount of ash, covering the whole are up to Mid-Range. The ash will hide the user from the opponents view before it starts to float down to the ground. Even after the ash has landed on the ground, the users chakra will remain in it trough a connection via the users feet when standing on the ashes.
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    ±± Declined ±±
    This is too similar to the cannon one.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 01-08-2013 at 06:41 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Mugen Ryukyu View Post
    Link to approved Cfs - http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...&postcount=201

    (Kaji Bokushingu Sensu) - Fire Boxing Style
    Rank: N/A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: (Taijutsu rules)
    Description: The user raises their fists up close to their face and begins slightly hopping from left to right in place. By using this style, they must concentrate on their opponent at all times. And it has basically became a reflex to jab and dodge, making the user moves a little faster than average (nothing compared to gates speed). The user also is ready to block at will, since his fists are already raised to do so. In this style the user only uses punches and constantly shifts their feet to move at lightning fast speed being able to dodge attacks with ease. After they get into stance, they begin to create reserves of fire chakra into their hands preparing themselves to use various fire type blasts. So when they punch they release fireballs from they're fist.
    Note: Can only be taught by Mugen Ryukyu
    Note: being in this style involves a strong cardio system, so it's very difficult to maintain without getting exhausted.
    1- training session let's the user maintain for 2 turns
    2:3 - training sessions lets the user maintain for 5 turns
    5- 10 training sessions lets the user maintain for 10 turns
    A Master of fire boxing can maintain it for 15 turns.

    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing - Bringer Of Hell
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user begins by hopping in place then dashes at the opponent, once at top speed the user than leaps into the air towards the opponent and comes down on top of him releasing a huge burst of fire from his fist blasting the enemy backwards and resulting in serious burns.



    ______________
    ~ Declined ~
    The gif doesn't look like a huge burst of fire


    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing - Bob & Weave
    Rank: N/A
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Due to the fact the fire boxing style only reaches upto mid-range this leaves users at a disadvantage in a long range bout, so to compensate. Due to the stamina/speed training the user begins to hop in place and becomes light on his feet and utilizes quick spins, ducks and side-steps to dodge incoming jutsu.



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    ~ First and Last Declined ~
    The rank of techniques cannot be N/A








    link to approved fighting style - http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...32#post7093832

    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user raises their fists up close to their face and begins slightly hopping from left to right in place. By using this style, they must concentrate on their opponent at all times. And it has basically became a reflex to jab and dodge, making the user moves a little faster than average (nothing compared to gates speed). The user also is ready to block at will, since his fists are already raised to do so. In this style the user only uses punches and constantly shifts their feet to move at lightning fast speed being able to dodge attacks with ease. After they get into stance, they begin to create reserves of fire chakra into their hands preparing themselves to use various fire type blasts. So when they punch they release fireballs from they're fist.
    Note: Can only be taught by Mugen Ryukyu
    Note: being in this style involves a strong cardio system, so it's very difficult to maintain without getting exhausted.
    1- training session let's the user maintain for 2 turns
    2:3 - training sessions lets the user maintain for 5 turns
    5- 10 training sessions lets the user maintain for 10 turns
    A Master of fire boxing can maintain it for 15 turns.
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    I don't see any reason for having this technique honestly, remove that you dodge moves at lightning fast speeds, that's too vague and too much, why does it say that you can dodge and block and has damage points when it says it's "supplementary"? honestly i'd rather you not going for this.


    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing - Bringer Of Hell
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user begins by hopping in place then dashes at the opponent, once at top speed the user than leaps into the air towards the opponent and comes down on top of him releasing a small ball of fire half the size of the user from his fist blasting the enemy backwards and resulting in serious burns.

    ______________________
    ✘ Approved ✘
    Edited the description a bit.


    Kaji Bokushingu | Fire Boxing - Bob & Weave
    Rank: B
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Due to the fact the fire boxing style only reaches upto mid-range this leaves users at a disadvantage in a long range bout, so to compensate. Due to the stamina/speed training the user begins to hop in place and becomes light on his feet and utilizes quick spins, ducks and side-steps to dodge incoming jutsu.

    _________________________
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    Too vague, the way this is right now, you can duck, and side step any technique which is ridiculous, you could restrict it to Taijutsu or something similar, not Gates techniques normal freeform taijutsu and according to your speed.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 09:51 AM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by -Avenger- View Post
    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Tiamat Umi no Megami) Summoning technique: Tiamat The Sea Goddess
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Tiamat is a white with sea greenish feathered bustard. The color of her feather is due to her affinity towards water element and hence called as Sea Goddess. She is capable of using water element up to the user's rank(The user requires to waive hand seals, if any for her). She is capable of shooting blasts of water bullets at the enemy (equivalent to A rank) from her mouth. She has also trained herself to use her beak and legs for attacking her opponents (and other summons).

    Note: Can be summoned once.
    Note: Lasts for 4 turns max.
    Note: Her abilities can only be used 3 times.
    Note: Tiamat's techniques count towards the users move count.
    Note: Can carry two persons on her back.


    X-Declined-X Well you cant perform hand seals for each other, that isn't allowed. Collaboration ninjutsu is fine but better explain that in the description.

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    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Tiamat Umi no Megami) Summoning technique: Tiamat The Sea Goddess
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user summons Tiamat one of the boss summons. Tiamat is a sea greenish blue bustard whose color comes from her affinity towards water element and hence called as Sea Goddess. She stands 40 feet in height and has a large wingspan. Due to the fact that she has large body and has strong wings, she is capable of carrying up to 3 people on her back without loosing much speed. She is capable of using water techniques up to the user's rank. She has the ability of shooting rapid blasts of water bullets at the enemy (equivalent to A rank) from her mouth. She has also trained herself to use her beak and claws as extra means of attack.

    • Can be summoned twice.
    • Lasts for 5 turns max.
    • Her abilities can be used 3 times.
    • Any techniques used by her count towards the user's move count.

    ________________________
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    mention how long her wings, using water up to your rank is a no, up to S-rank with no handseals is the maximum that i'm going to allow, make her summoned once, up to 4 turns, remove that restriction about her abilities can be used 3 times, that's vague, just restrict the amount of times she can use that rapid water blasts, mention how big the blasts are and how many are they.


    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Šamaš kōtei) Summoning Technique: Šamaš The Emperor
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user summons Šamaš The Emperor, one of the oldest bustard. He has a golden colored crest on his head as result of his fire affinity. He is a fairly large summon about as big as the Hawk Sasuke summoned. He is able to use fire techniques up to the user's rank as a result of intense training with the user. In addition to that, he has a special ability to absorb fire jutsu up to S-rank and release the same later at user's will. He can carry one person on his back at fast speeds with great maneuverability providing the user with good aerial skills and making them a hard target to hit. Just like Sin, Šamaš is also one of the fastest Bustards. He has trained himself to use his beak and claws as extra means of attack.

    • The number of times he can absorb a fire jutsu depends on the rank of jutsu & which he absorbs first.
      B-rank and below: 3 times (or)
      A-rank: Twice (or)
      S-rank: Once per battle
    • Can only be summoned once per battle.
    • Lasts for 5 turns max.
    • Any other techniques used by Šamaš counts towards the user's move count.

    Link of contract approval.
    _____________________________
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    Up to S-rank fire techniques max with no handseals, remove the absorption ability completely, remove that whole "a hard target to hit" stuff, and the great speed, up to 4 turns max.


    (Yoton: Dai kazangan no Hashira Jutsu) - Lava Release: Great Lava Pillars Technique
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack\Supplementary\Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This jutsu is derieved from (Yoton: Yurasu no Kazangan) - Lava Release: Rock to Lava technique and advance version of it. The user gathers a great deal of chakra within their body as they surge it all throughout the ground and brings out large amount of magma from deep under the ground, changing the terrain to a fiery terrain of lava. Then by performing a single hand seal, the user causes multiple pillars of lava to erupt from it which rise up to 12 meters in height and are 2 meters in diameter. The numbers of lava pillars created depends on the user.

    • Can be used twice.
    • No S-rank lava jutsu in next turn.
    • Can be taught by -Avenger-

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    So this is a rip off of the Rock to Lava technique, and the Great Fire Flame Pillars technique crammed into one? ya not going to happen.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 01-08-2013 at 10:00 AM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    aprroved cfs: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...53#post5738953

    Tsubaki no Hayashita Sennin: Yopparatta Kobito | Dance of the Bearded Sage: Toxicated Dwarf
    Type: Supplementary/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will unleash a fixed amount of hair from his body, towards a water source. Using the natural ability of hair, to absorb liquids, the user will further increase this with the help of chakra, making his facial hair work as a sponge, sucking up any liquid source his beard is making contact with. The liquid will be stored within his hair. The absorption can also occur with already-existing hair jutsus, meaning it can be combined with other Bearded Sage techniques. The absorption procces doesn't last long, though of course, the bigger source the longer time. Naturally it would be able to empty a big pond of water, within very few seconds. The user's running speed will be slightly altered when having absorbed a high amount of water, however it will also be functional as a potential water source for the user, for future use.
    ~ Useable three times per match
    ~ Must wait one turn before re-use of the technique
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    Too generic. Would enable you to suck up virtually almost any volume of water. Also, shoots hair? No...you would make facial hair grow and absorb water in contact with it. But the volume of your hair is directly related to the water volume you can absorb. So more water, more volume. Add that somewhere. And don't forget, the water would need to go somewhere if you want to absorb again.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Updating some old techniques. I can't quote them, as they're from the old thread, but I'll provide an exact link and a copy-pasted version.
    (http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post2619471)
    Wind release: Force wave = Fuuton: Chikara-ha
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This jutsu allows the user to defend against sound and frequencies, by bending the wind itself, the user can create an orb of bended wind, which will reject sound waves and frequencies. When strong and harmful sound or frequencies gets close to it, the wind will bounce outwards, like when you burst a balloon, and the wind will thereby carry the sound/frequencies away from the user, rendering them useless.
    Notes:
    • Can only be used three times per battle.
    • Can only be used once every second turn.
    • Only works on A-ranked techniques and below.
    • Can only be taught by ZeroG.
    (Fūton ♦ Kaminaritataku) – Wind Release ♦ Thunderstrike
    Rank: A-Rank
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This technique allows the user to defend against Sound by bending the Wind itself. By infusing chakra into the air, the user can create transparent shapes of wind that will reject Soundwaves by acting as shock-absorbers and redirecting the pressure. The user, applying the same concept on a larger scale, can also use this technique to compress attacks composed of some form of pressure, such as Sound and Wind. This can increase the power and density of the technique in question to such an extent that its rank is increased by one (1). Unfortunately, this also makes the technique in question much easier to avoid, given that it has decreased in size.
    -Can only be used three (3) times per battle.
    -Can only be used once every second (2) turn.
    -Can only be used to strengthen techniques of A-rank and below.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    X-Declined-X Remove the part where you increase a techniques rank or empower it in any way.

    (I know it's a lot of edits, but the purpose remains. I've just fixed most of the horrible spelling and grammar =/)

    Quote Originally Posted by Zero Kelvin View Post
    Resubmitting:
    (Ichitenkai) - One Point Release
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: A Taijutsu technique where the user takes control of their increased speed for a single moment, harnessing all of its power into a single punch or kick. While destruction on a great scale is the trademark of high-speed movement, this technique requires a great deal of finesse and skill. By using the joints in the arm and by moving one’s body with incredible precision, the user transforms the single, destructive attack into a focused, whip-like strike. Instead of breaking many bones or crushing entire boulders, this technique allows the single attack to solely affect the point it hits, in return for completely destroying that single point. It is possible to use this technique with enormous speed, increasing its power, but there's a limit to how fast one can move and still retain the finesse needed for this technique.
    -Can only be used twice (2) per battle.
    -No Forbidden-ranked Taijutsu techniques can be used during the following turn.
    -The user must be moving at Speed Level 15 to use this technique.
    -If the user's Speed Level surpasses 31, this technique can no longer be used.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    ~Declined. No speed chart references will be allowed~

    Re-attempting to edit an approved technique. The technique was approved in the old thread, so I can't quote it, but I'll leave the link and bold the edits.
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...postcount=3094

    (Fūinjutsu: Tōtemu Bakuyaku) – Sealing Technique: Explosive Totem
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user focuses chakra through his body, marking an object he's in physical contact with as a 'totem', causing a small, transparent sealing array to appear on the object. When the user activates it, the totem will use the chakra stored inside it to destabilize itself violently, causing an enormous explosion of chakra.
    -Can only be used two times per battle.
    -Activating the totem does not count as a move if it's done immediately after the seal is applied. Otherwise, it counts as a move.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    X-Declined-X Highlighted part is vague. From my understand array is a systematic placement of seal or explosive tags. The placement itself has a meaning or concept within it like explaining a seals number (Your techinque below) or placing an array in a manner it creates no opening for detection by means of chakra, there are numerous examples. Explain "Transparent sealing array". Furthermore, long range explosion? Why not just spread explosive tags and explode them when you wish?

    New submission:
    (Fūinjutsu: Akuta Fūjin) – Sealing Technique: Trash Seal
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 15
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user focuses chakra through his body, causing a sealing array to appear on an object or person he’s in physical contact with. The seal can be odd-numbered or even-numbered, depending on the user’s specifications. The seal has no function in and by itself, but can be a valuable ally to one who wishes to cause an imbalance in a seal.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    X-Declined-X Do not resubmit. Yes im a sealing expert this is the first thing i learned. Yes i know how this works and what a sealing number is. No im not allowing this, you could perhaps wait till i possibly make fuuinjutsu more detailed.
    Re-attempting to edit an approved technique. The technique was approved in the old thread, so I can't quote it, but I'll leave the link and bold the edits.
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...postcount=3094

    (Fūinjutsu: Tōtemu Bakuyaku) – Sealing Technique: Explosive Totem
    Rank: A-Rank
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user focuses chakra through his body, marking an object he's in physical contact with as a 'totem', causing the Kanji for 'explosion' to appear on the object. When the user activates it, the totem will use the chakra stored inside it to destabilize itself violently, causing an huge explosion of chakra.
    -Can only be used two times per battle.
    -Activating the totem does not count as a move if it's done immediately after the seal is applied. Otherwise, it counts as a move.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.
    __________________________
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    X-Approved-X
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Ryukens Customs
    (Raiton: Denki sonā) - Electric Sonar
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: 2.5 km radius (roughly 3 miles)
    Chakra Cost:20
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:User claps hands together, forms the hand sign Snake, and then presses their palm on the ground sending out a pulse of electric energy imbued with their chakra into the ground giving them the ability to know what general direction an opponent is in. It is a great counter against jutsu aimed at impairing vision, such as the Kirigakure no jutsu because no one has the ability to suppress the electrical pulses given off by the human body.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.
    Note: Is not effective against speed enhanced shinobi such as Maito Guy and Rock Lee.
    Note: Last for only three turns


    (Fuuton: Ryū no kami no ibuki) Breath of the Dragon God
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: short-long range
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: After making the rabbit, dog, and rooster hand seals the user sucks in a great lungful of breath through their mouth and then releases it through their nostrils sending a gale force wind at their opponent.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.

    (Fuuton: Junkan yōsai) Cyclical Citadel
    Type: Defense/Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: short-mid range
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: Similar to the Hyuuga's rotation, the user does the hand seals horse, dragon, snake, and creates a vortex of wind around themselves. Weapons and jutsu of the same rank or less are repelled by the wind, and if someone tries to blindly pass through the wind they will suffer damage. This jutsu last one turn, and can only be used twice.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.

    (Raiton: Nō meitei) Cerebral Inebriation
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: After rapidly making the hand signs Dog and Ox the user flows lightning based chakra to the tips of his index and middle finger on his right hand. When placed upon the back of the opponent's neck an electric shock is sent to their Cerebral Cortex, knocking out shinobi of the same rank or less while impairing those of higher rank.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.
    Note: As explained above shinobi of the same rank or lower are instantly KOed.
    Note: Shinobi one rank higher suffer disorientation, speech impairment, short term memory loss, and lack of concentration therefore they are unable to use jutsu A rank and higher for five turns and their speed is decreased by -10.
    Note: Shinobi two ranks or higher than my own suffer similar effects except they can use jutsu up
    to A rank but no higher for three turns and their speed is decreased by -5
    Note User must be just as fast or faster than opponent for jutsu to be used.

    (Raiton:Sutatikku shokku shōkōgun) Static Shock Syndrome
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: After rapidly making the hand signs Snake, Dragon, Sheep, Boar, Snake the user pours electricity from his open pores into those of his opponents sending needle sharp pain throughout their body.
    Note: Can only be used by Ryuken and those taught by Alchemist.
    Note: For those of the same nin rank or lower the opponent suffers -10 damage points for three turns.
    Note: Weakens the visual acuity of opponents for three turns.
    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    inaccurate templates, more than 3 techniques per submission, it's obvious you didn't even bother to read the rules before posting, so i'm giving you a warning right now because it seems this is your first time posting, if you break these rules again i'll ban you from the CJ thread for 3 cycles, and infract you for not following the rules.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Shade Dracova View Post
    Summoning Technique: Herupā
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will draw blood, perform a line of several handseals then he or she will thrust their arm downwards and Herupā The Servant will appear. Herupā meaning helper is a weak red cardinal from Aries. He has a black bill, black face and a vibrant red/pink body like most male cardinals. He can fly at speeds up to 30 mph. He is ruffly the size of your average adult parrot meaning he is the smallest in Aries. Herupā can speak perfect english and can sense chakra in a short range of him and his summoner whether it be underground or in the air. As soon as Herupā is summoned he begins to save up his chakra. Once per battle, Herupā can also release all of his saved chakra and disturb any genjutsu that may have been casted upon the summoner. After this is done, he poofs away.
    *Must have signed Red Cardinal Contract
    *Can only be summoned twice
    *The genjutsu can disturb up to A-Rank genjutsu if kept on the field for more than 3 turns
    *The genjutsu technique cost an additional 60 chakra from her summoner plus it counts as a move
    *Summoning him counts as a move also
    *The summoner will be dizzy after she is dispersed
    ___________________________
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    Genjutsu: Serufu horobi no kōdo|Illusionary Art: Code of Self Damnation
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will release his/her chakra into a target of his or her choice. After, the user takes control of the target's vision and hearing. The user will project images of bright flashing numbers and letters followed by high pitched screeching noise. A sharp headache and dizziness are the effects of the flashing numbers and letters. It is flashing at speeds of 7 fps which can easily induced the mentioned effects. The letters and numbers also contain subliminal messages such as "Death awaits" and "You're weak". This can break the opponents will to fight if the genjutsu is kept in effect for a long period of time.
    *Can only be taught by Shade Dracova
    *Can only be used 3 times
    _________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    It needs a medium to trigger the genjutsu, like handseals, light, sound etc, sound mediums being restricted to sound release users, remove the colored parts and reduce it's rank to B-rank.
    Resubmission:

    Genjutsu: Serufu horobi no kōdo|Illusionary Art: Code of Self Damnation
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will release his/her chakra into a target of his or her choice. After, the user performs the snake handseal as a medium to trigger the jutsu. The user will project images of bright flashing numbers and letters followed by high pitched screeching noise. A sharp headache and dizziness are the effects of the flashing numbers and letters. It is flashing at speeds of 7 fps which can easily induced the mentioned effects. The letters and numbers also contain subliminal messages such as "Death awaits" and "You're weak".
    *Can only be taught by Shade Dracova
    *Can only be used 3 times
    _________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Since you didn't bother to bold the changes you made about the medium and the handseal, i'm not going to approve it, reduce the rank to B-rank and make it "Short - Mid" Mid alone means it can't be performed in Short range, 1 handseal isn't good enough.


    New Submission:

    Dracova no shinigami āto: Shinigami no gurippu|Reaper Art Of Dracova: Reaper's Grip
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will engage the from a range by releasing compressed chakra through the sole's of their feet and leaning forward which sends them catapulting at the opponent. While he/she is moving quickly they will use their scythe and strike the ground in front of the target sending debri into their face. Without hesitation or losing speed, the user drops his scythe and grabs the opponent by the neck and releases a large concentrated mass of chakra into the opponents body. By doing this the user's chakra will interfere with the opponents chakra flow making it so the opponent molds chakra at a significatnly slower rate. The user grabs his scythe then jumps back before the opponent can retaliate.
    -Must be taught by a Grim Reaper or Master
    -The effect last for 3 turns.
    __________________________
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    What is this? a ninjutsu? genjutsu? Kenjutsu? your going to concentrate chakra into your opponent's body and slow the rate of their chakra flow being molded? you do realize that's the work of Gentle Fist right? don't resubmit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Illusion Art: Fast Forward (Genjutsu: Hayaokuri)
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will look in his opponent eye(s) and put them under a genjutsu. He will then manipulate his opponent senses and slow down his anticipation ability by performing the half tiger seal. This will cause the opponent to see everything in fast forward, and loose track of what is happening. The intensity of this genjutsu depends on the difference of rank between the user and the opponent.
    -Needs direct eye contact
    -If the user and the opponent are the same rank, the opponent will slow down by a little, and perceive 3 hand seals in the time needed to perform a single one.
    -If the user is one rank higher, the opponent will be slower by 6 handseals speed, 9 for 2 ranks higher etc. If the opponent is of a higher rank than the user, he will perceive the time needed to perform 2 hand seals as that needed to perform a single one.
    -Lasts 2 turns
    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Similar techniques exist.


    Summoning: Zapdos of Thunder (Shōkan: Kaminari no Zapdos)
    Rank: S
    Type: Summon
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Description: Zapdos is a giant vulture, of the same size as Gamabunda. He is a Raiton master, and can use raiton up to forbidden rank. He can carry a full size Akimichi on his back (size of the Gedo Mazo). He is yellow in color, and his plumage is constantly disparaged. He can also perform hand seals with his claws, although the jutsu performed on the hand of the user, will be performed in the Vulture's beak instead. To summon him, the user will put his blood on the contract fan, perform the needed hand seals and swing the fan in the air above him. Zapdos will appear right above the user, already flying. He can speak in human tongue as well.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle
    -Must be Kage rank or higher to summon him, or one won't earn his respect, and he will fly away
    ________________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Up to Forbidden rank lightning is a no, S-rank lightning max, how is he going to perform handseals with his claws and he's a bird? make him use S-rank lightning with no handseals instead, the same size of Gamabunta is too much, half Gamabunta's size is the limit for birds, being able to carry someone as big as the Gedo Mazo? lolwut? Gedo Mazo is bigger than Gamabunta, it doesn't make any sense, take that out.


    Signed the Vulture contract

    resubmitting:
    (Tegatana: Furashu Ken) Hand-sword: Flash Sword
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (-30 to user)
    Description: The Tegatana user will focus lighting chakra to his tegatana, which he can then extend up to mid range in front of him (in a straight line). The chakra is invisible to the naked eye (except the chakra enveloping the hand directly), but the opponent can hear a sound similar to the sound the chidori produces. As the chakra comes in contact with a target, a huge lighting bolt will flash for the duration of the blink of an eye from the hand of the tegatana user till the end of the blade. The sheer power of the lighting will cause an explosion, and the user will be hit by a shockwave propelling his body backwards and damaging him severally.
    -Usable twice per battle, once for each hand.
    -Usage will give the hand used with first degree burns.
    -User is unable to use raiton higher than B rank during the next turn
    (Tegatana: Furashu Ken) Hand-sword: Flash Sword
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (-30 to user)
    Description: The Tegatana user will focus lighting chakra to his tegatana, which he can then extend up to mid range in front of him (in a straight line). The chakra is almost invisible to the naked eye, but the opponent can hear a sound similar to the sound the chidori produces. The chakra extended from the tegatana is a straight line of chakra that needs to be directed to the target. As the chakra comes in contact with a target, a huge lighting bolt will flash for the duration of the blink of an eye from the hand of the tegatana user till the end of the blade. The sheer power of the lighting will cause an explosion, and the user will be hit by a shockwave propelling his body backwards and damaging him severally.
    -Usable twice per battle, once for each hand.
    -Usage will give the hand used with first degree burns.
    -User is unable to use raiton higher than B rank during the next turn
    ______________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    So you chose to leave out Kiritsugu's checking?


    Creator of the Tegatana CFS

    ✘ You are hereby banned from the CJ thread for two weekly cycles, for trying to trick us by leaving out Kiritsugu's checking of the technique that can be found -here-, your ban will be lifted on the start of the third weekly cycle after this one. ✘


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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by elmage View Post
    (katon: jigoku supirittsu) fire release: hell spirits
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Shot-Long range
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user fires several large fireballs, five at most, that takes the shape of ghosts flying towards the target, if either of the fireballs impact on any physical object, it causes a massive explosion, incinerating everything within the explosions reach.
    - Can be used twice with a three turns interval
    - User cannot use fire for three turns
    - mastery of fire is required
    - Can only be taught by elmage

    X-Approved-X
    ~Updating technique~
    (katon: jigoku supirittsu) fire release: hell spirits
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: mid-Long range
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user fires several large fireballs, five at most, that takes the shape of ghosts flying towards the target, if either of the fireballs impact on any physical object, it causes a massive explosion, incinerating and destroying everything within the explosions reach. Due to the size of the explosion, if the technique is used at short range, the explosion would affect both the user and the target due to its blast radius.
    - Can be used twice with a three turns interval
    - User cannot use fire for three turns
    - mastery of fire is required
    - Can only be taught by elmage
    ______________________
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    Mention how far the blast radius extends to.


    ~new submissions~

    (Fuuton: shi hyoushi shippuu) Wind release: four binding tornadoes
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Long range
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user sends his chakra into the sky causing, and creates four large hurricane around the target, with the distance of either hurricane to the user is short range. the hurricanes pulls the air around the victim towards itself, hence, pulling the victim and at the same time the hurricanes close in on the victim, and as it does, the strength with which the hurricanes pulls the victim increases, and would join to form a massive hurricane that slices the victim rapidly, and delivering several cuts to the victim. The four hurricane takes about 5-7 seconds to be formed depending on the users mastery of wind, after which it will be difficult to escape it.

    -Can only be used once
    -user cannot use wind for two turns after the jutsu has been used
    -the user cannot use any S-rank jutsu in the next turn
    -Can only be taught by elmage
    ________________________________
    ✘ Declined, Do not Resubmit ✘
    Overpowered, you say that you send your chakra into the sky then the tornadoes are made magically around the target? you also say it's away from the user by 5 meters, fix the description next time.

    Katon: inferuno kyuutai
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: the user sends his fire chakra towards his victim, he then creates an orb, of fire around the user, the heat inside the orb steadily increases as the user adds more chakra, then he finally performs the tiger seal and then orb explodes.

    - Can be used twice
    - No S rank in the same and next turn
    - No fire for two turns
    - Can only be taught by elmage
    ______________________________
    ✘ Declined, Do not Resubmit ✘
    Fire cannot be materialized, the technique is very overpowered, and doesn't make sense, also next time fix your descriptions, because the way this is now is an orb that's made around you, as you mentioned it's made around the user not the opponent, and then heats up and explodes so it should kill you.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Sairensuburēkā) Breaker of Silence
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: N/A (40)
    Damage points: N/A (80)(+5 Kenjutsu)
    Description: This is an especially large, chakra-infused curved blade has been passed down through generations. This Zanbouto has a ring on its handle, resembling that of a Kunai, where the origin of the name comes from. Because of the sheer size and weight of the blade, it is normally carried on back, where it may be seen having bandages wrapped on it. The blade has a tremendous amount of power and cutting ability, although when the user is able to manipulate the chakra within the blade to undo the few bandages, which allow the Blade to unleash it true abilities.

    Abilities Notes:
    When the bandages become undone, the user is able to send an immense amount of their chakra into the blade because the sword itself is capable of storing chakra, In doing so the user can send various forms of powerful concentrated chakra at their target at enormous speeds. When infused with chakra, the blade radiates a bright white glow. When send powerful "shots" of chakra at the target which can destroy up to B-Rank defenses, the user is able to send three of these "shots/blasts" at a time. Also the chakra can be molded into various shapes and sizes (for example: a longer sword) which allows the sword strikes to reach up to Mid-Range. When infused with chakra, the blade can destroy up to B-Rank defenses due to its devastating power and force. The concentrated chakra strikes are that of an S-Rank attack. It roughly takes the user about the same amount of time to form one or two hand-seals to extends the blades full reach and range. Ultimately the size can vary depending on how much chakra is stored within the blade.

    -The style of this blade, is very unique as it is identical to that of a Giant Kunai Knife, that allows it's wielder to store chakra and ultimately release and manipulate the shape of it. It gives the user the ability to extend the reach and un-extend it's reach up to Mid Range. When unraveled, the word "Oni" can be seen engraved on the blade itself.

    -This blade is razor sharp allowing for stronger use of Kenjutsu.

    -This blade is made out of a composite metal that does not dull.

    -This blade cannot be destroyed.

    Restriction Notes:.
    -Can only be used or taught by Mizuke.
    -Chakra releasing counts as one of the three moves.
    -Chakra Techniques can only be used three times per battle.

    Note: For a picture reference, feel free to VM/PM.
    -Chakra Cost = 40 for chakra-based techniques
    -Damage = 80 for chakra-based techniques
    _________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    No chakra infusable swords, and no chakra blasting swords allowed anymore.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Gecko
    Scroll Owner: Merita
    Other Users who have signed contract: No one until now
    Summoning Boss if existing: Will be added later
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Will be added later.

    Geckos have movable eyelids, making their eyesight wider than the average eyes. Their climbing skills, allied with their ability to walk on smooth surfaces and also upside down, make them an unique summon.

    Geckos' hunting are most based on ambuscade, making them a very silent animal by nature. They are also very fast, and together with the ability to take out their own tail to fool the enemy, they are very good escapees.

    They have elemental affinities for Earth and Water.

    Abilities for RP:
    -Proficient climbing and sticking to surfaces, can pretty much climb any sort of surface
    -Super prehensile tongue, (can extend and retract, and is strong enough to attack/ensnare the opponent)
    -Spiked skin, capable of extending out spikes to impale the opponent (This is a Narutoverse on their already spiked skin)
    -Autotomy (drop tail to fool the enemy; can be used as a Kawarimi)

    Gecko Tattoo



    Everyone that signs the Gecko Contract have this tattoo on their right forearm

    - Can only be taught by Merita

    __________________________________________________ _____________________________
    ___________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Geckos are basically Lizards, or a lizard subspecies, so unless you have permission from the owner of the lizards contract "Riku.." to make a subspecies of his contract, this won't be approved.


    Daiōtsuchi (Great Sledgehammer)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: N/A (+30)
    Damage Cost: N/A (+60)
    Description: The Great Sledgehammer is a weapon forged by Sunagakure's weapon specialists. Passed down through generations, this sledgehammer is really powerful. It weighs more than normal for sledgehammers, even it being smaller than the average. The hammer has a great raw power, able to shatter through rock with a single blow. But their power resides on its user's chakra.
    The hammer is very powerful itself, but can be more powerful if the user sends their chakra through it. The hammer don't coat the user's chakra in itself like normal weapons do, but actually conserve it inside, and liberates it in slow chakra vibrations. Those chakra vibrations reverberate through the hammer's body, and when it strikes a target, deals a powerful single blow.
    The chakra-based blows are able to pass through up to B-rank defenses and able to withstand other chakra-infused weapons.

    Restrictions:
    - Can only be used or taught by Merita
    - The user must wait 2 turns to deal a chakra-based blow.
    - 30 points of Chakra per chakra blow.
    ______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Closer to approval than any CW i've checked in this page, just limit the "chakra blow" into a rank, and add a usage limit, and remove that the hammer is very powerful in itself, remove the "able to withstand other chakra infused weapons" that's too generic and too vague. should be fine then.


    Feel free to edit anything if needed >_O
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Sheep
    Scroll Owner: Professor Sarutobi
    Other Users who have signed contract: none yet
    Summoning Boss if existing: None yet
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None yet
    Description and Background:
    While traveling the world Professor Sarutobi one day came to the nature country which had no ninja village of their own, only farms all across the island country. There is where Sarutobi found a sheep farm with a family that were often harassed by rogue ninjas from another land and were using the only thing they had to fight back attempting to make the sheep capable of defending them but so far had very little success. In exchange for helping them and killing the rogue ninja the family gave Professor Sarutobi the sheep they had been attempting to weaponize, bringing the sheep back to Iwagakure Sarutobi began breeding his own sheep and training them in the ninja arts with varying results.

    Behaviorally, sheep are gregarious, precocial, defenseless creatures. But what does that mean? Gregarious means that they flock together or like to be with a group. It is rare to see a sheep by itself because of their gregarious nature. Precocial means that they have a high degree of independence at birth. This means that they can stand on their feet shortly after birth. Sheep are defenseless for the most part against predators like coyotes and wild dogs. Sheep are also very selective in their grazing habits. Sheep have a split in their upper lip, with this they are able to pick the preferred leaves off of the plant.

    At one time all sheep were wild. Around 10,000 BC sheep were domesticated by the humans. Most of the wool breeds of sheep were developed from Moulfan sheep. Most of the hair breeds are similar to the Urial sheep of ancient times.

    As the animals were raised under tamed conditions, they went through several changes. On the outside the sheep began to develop more wool and less hair. The color of the wool and hair changed from brown and shades of brown to whites and blacks. Their ears became more of a lop ear than an erect ear. The horns that the wild sheep possessed were weakened and disappeared from many breeds. On the inside the sheep changed as well. These internal changes happened at both ends. The tails had less vertebrates, or bones than the sheep do now. Today's sheep also have a smaller brain than the sheep 12,000 years ago.

    So far the largest the sheep have seen growing to half of Gamabunta size, these were fed special chakra enhanced grain grown by Iwagakure's researchers. Most however are the standard size for sheep ( 125 pounds and 3 feet tall)




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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Winged-Lemur
    Scroll Owner: Saikyokage
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: Momo

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Momo) Summoning : Momo
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: 50
    Attack points: N/A
    Description: Momo is roughly the size of Gamakichi and can transform to the size of Gamabunta is mostly used for travel but is also useful in battle Hey Carries a pair of twin tanto on his back which he uses in battle he Can be summed in mid air and take fly for a speedy get away or if falling from the sky can catch you. He is also able to mimic the bodies of anyone perform hand seals and in theory replicate that ability, An ability adapted from the sharigan placed in his eye socket after losing a eye.
    • Can only be summoned once a battle.
    • Last Two turns.

    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: TBA
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    Winged-Lemurs aren't real animals, so they can't be approved, mythical creatures aren't approvable anymore as well, lol and Sharingan placed in his eye socket? =_=
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Zanji's permission: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...=3277&u2=14204


    Summoning Animal: Wyvern (Hiryu)
    Scroll Owner: Xylon
    Other Users who have signed contract: None
    Summoning Boss if existing: None
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None
    Description and Background: Wyverns are a rare species of reptiles often regarded as mythical. It’s a Draconic creature with 4 limbs, two legs and a pair of wings similar to its ‘cousin’ which gained much more attention ,the ‘dragon’ having 4-6 limbs and depending on the specie a pair of wings. Although similarities exist, wyverns are much different than dragons in both behavior and anatomy, more aggressive the previous in any manner while dragons are civil.
    Where the habitat of a dragon is generally close to the land, Wyverns prefer living in high altitudes like mountains and trees that have lived thousands of years. On rare occasions they would occupy abandoned buildings created by humans. Being reptiles, wyverns have a set of unique capabilities, something common in the animal group. Mating among wyverns is forceful, young ones are born in eggs and their gender depends on the amount of heat the egg received during development, wyverns tend to breath fire over their eggs to aid this. To protect the young one from the extreme temperatures, the scale-like shells of the eggs are heat/fire resistant.
    As they grow up, to sharpen teeth and biting strength for hunting, they practice over mountains by biting the rocks with their bare mouths. A fully grown wyvern would have the bite strength of approximately 2000 kgs (1200 kgs is an ‘average’ crocodiles bite strength), with teeth sharp and strong they rip off their prey with relative ease but more than that, platinum from the mountain rocks get attached in their mouths making their bites deadlier, the attached platinum when struck inside flesh causes metal poisoning to its preys where wyverns themselves are immune to it.
    Wyvern require a lot of food to keep their functions running, their gut bacteria digests food and release hydrogen which is stored in a separate bladder linked to the oeso****us. They use this hydrogen in two ways, breathing fire and flight. Having platinum stuck up in their mouths, wyverns could exhale hydrogen from their mouth which reacts with the platinum and oxygen in the air creature and combustion which released in the form of a stream of fire, (varying ranks, the method is natural therefore would not require any chakra cost or technique however, there is more to it). Wyverns have several characteristics typical of flight. The honeycomb structure of their bones allows them to be light, while retaining their strength. Huge hearts are also typical of flight, as chest muscles would need vast amounts of oxygen-rich blood in order to move the large wings. Although they possess large wings, the wing-span/weight ratio of wyverns is not enough for the wings to give enough lift. Their capacity to hold hydrogen further lightens them to fly, they can migrate in relatively high speeds by reaching a high altitude, having a huge heart and lung capacity makes them fully functional and buoyance keeps then above the air. Their anatomy makes them both agile and incredibly strong allowing it to lift objects 3x its original weight without losing any speed. Given their functions, their hierarchy is based on sizes. A larger wyvern would have more strength and capacity to hold hydrogen inside allowing it to breathe a larger body of fire. Since the hydrogen capacity, although they keep great reserves isn’t unlimited, there is a limit to how much fire they could breathe. Thus, going back to size in determining how strong a wyvern is in its wilderness. Lack of Hydrogen does not however affect flight since it has more to do with light weightiness then hydrogen.
    Wyverns are prideful creatures in nature, they consider snakes and reptiles inferior and their prey even worse. They have a competitive side when against dragons and would often spar to determine who holds supremacy as species. Although rare it is possible for wyverns and dragons to mate among each other and the offspring could be either a wyvern or a dragon, making it possible for a wyvern to have a dragon sibling. They do not allow humans to make contract with them in a superiority complex so long they are unable to overpower them fully. Humans would teach them how to communicate and control chakra although not being able to perform hand seals leaves the ability useless. But combined with their techniques, wyverns would get stronger as a summoning creature. Humans would draw sealing scripts and patterns over their wings (like orochimaru draws 3 tomoe over his snakes) allowing wyverns to channel chakra within them and induce basic illusions to whomever that looks at their wing patterns. These scripts would again be used for elemental combinations, by sealing elemental techniques prior to battle such as a wind blast which would be in conjunction to fire breathing.
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    Spirits of Balance: Reaper’s Wisps (Onryodo: Shinigami no Shiranui)
    Rank: S
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/a
    Description: The user release performs a series of hand seals (alternatively, release a seal that generates the technique) that forms six Will-o-Wisp’s around floating around the user. These wisps revolve around the user playfully making echoing sounds in little girls voice, the user is able to manipulate them to surround other people/objects similar to Scorch release: Extremely Steaming Murder. The wisps are harmless to humans, summoning animals and other beings, they act upon the users will or independently towards incoming threats. When released towards an object, upon impact the wisp burst into a huge white flame, the burning is fast but not instantaneous and anything that’s burned by the wisps (even water and fire itself, and nothing alive as stated above), is sealed inside the users consciousness until release. The technique is one of the several sealing methods of Onryodo, and takes the form of Will-o-wisps which is translated as Shiranui, the word shiranui also has the literal meaning of unknown fire which explains concept of the technique.
    Note: Last 4 turns, can only make 6 wisps per use.
    -Usable twice.
    -Can seal techniques up to S rank.

    (6 Wisps because its mythically ideal, 6 wisps appear mostly because the numbers affiliation to imperfection. And because many techniques shoot multiple projectiles and attack from different angles, not implying i can defend against 6 techniques with a single use)
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    Quote Originally Posted by Xylon View Post
    Sealing Technique: Dark Ecriture (Fuinjutsu: Yami no Chojutsu)
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10/turn)
    Damage Points: 10/ turn (to the user)
    Description: Dark Ecriture is a technique that allows the user to detect hidden seals within the users field of vision. The technique activates using a seal of confrontation following which many sealing formula appear around the users left eye. They then begin to sink inside using the lens which itself is a painful process where the user needs to keep his eye open. Once performed the seals inside the eye filter the users vision making everything appear grayscale. All seals however that are hidden or apparent starts to glow, the user is able to see the glow even if the seals are hidden behind objects or clothes. With added focus he is able to read them identifying their purpose.
    Note: Usable twice in battle, Lasts 4 turns.



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    Add that it can only detect seals up to its own rank.
    Sealing Technique: Dark Ecriture (Fuinjutsu: Yami no Chojutsu)
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10/turn)
    Damage Points: 10/ turn (to the user)
    Description: Dark Ecriture is a technique that allows the user to detect hidden seals within the users field of vision. The technique activates using a seal of confrontation following which many sealing formula appear around the users left eye. They then begin to sink inside using the lens which itself is a painful process where the user needs to keep his eye open. Once performed the seals inside the eye filter the users vision making everything appear grayscale. All seals however that are hidden or apparent starts to glow, the user is able to see the glow even if the seals are hidden behind objects or clothes. With added focus he is able to read them identifying their purpose.
    Note: Usable twice in battle, Lasts 4 turns.
    -Can only detect techniques up to its own rank.
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Genjutsu-Hitojichi) - illusion technique- Hostage
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/defence
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user induces the target into a strong illusion,instantly making them notice a kunai that is held to the neck,the kunai is wielded from behind the target by an exact copy of the user thus why in some cases the target doesn't know its an illusion,if they have lost sight of the user. upon noticing the kunai,the target hears threatening words,to be completely still or get their throat slit.
    -Once per battle
    -The target is held hostage for the period of 3 turns then the illusion disperses leaving the target unharmed.
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    So how exactly is this genjutsu induced? it needs something like handseals, and in general genjutsu requires you to know the target's location, if you don't you can't catch him in the genjutsu, and the paralysis isn't done like that, it needs something restricting to happen in the genjutsu, like a chain that wraps around him or something of the sort, but hearing a few words won't paralyze him, lower the rank of this technique to a C-rank or a B-rank, it's not complicated enough to be an A-rank.
    (Genjutsu-Hitojichi) - illusion technique- Hostage
    Rank: B
    Type: Attack/defence
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user makes a half-tiger seal,whilst inducing the target into a strong illusion,instantly making them notice a kunai that is held to the neck,the kunai is wielded from behind the target by an exact copy of the user thus why in some cases the target doesn't know its an illusion,if they have lost sight of the user(but the user still knows their current location) upon noticing the kunai,the target hears threatening words,to be completely still or get their throat slit(this is common sense,like having a gun pointed to the head and told not to move,you won't do otherwise unless you know you're hallucinating).
    -twice per battle
    -The target is held hostage for the period of 3 turns then the illusion disperses leaving the target unharmed.
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    what common sense? you can choose to move if there's a gun pointed at your head, in the genjutsu you can't force your opponent to do anything, so he can't be paralyzed like that, because he can choose to move, so this is an invalid method, making the genjutsu voided, if a chain wrapped around him would be be able to move his arms or legs? no, so that way he is paralyzed, i gave you a chance, don't resubmit.


    Quote Originally Posted by Magic.. View Post
    Custom weapon

    (akuma ha-pu)Demon harp
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short/long
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The harp is made from pure stainless steel but light in weight and is capeable of conducting chakra.its strings are four in number and each strings produces different sharp tone when stroked. Each tone brands it's listeners with a particular type of illusion .Also the harp acts as a barrier against illusion attacks thrown at the welder, whilst notifying him/her what kind of illusion it is. Because of it's portablity and stylishness,the weilder is able to strap
    it unto his or her back,whilst in battle.

    -Note: The user can't perform handseals whilst holding the harp.
    - the harp blocks
    illusiön based attacks,except advanced ones(forbidden or ms illusions) whilst in the user's possession.
    -illusion shielding counts as one of 3 moves a turn and can only shield 5 times per match.
    -Note: The harp can only be used by Seto Kaiba.

    Zero --> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...49356&u2=51542
    Ruko--> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...=5162&u2=51542

    X-Pending-X Im not quite sure about this, it would help if you had a background in either sound or music. And it lets you avoid most S rank Genjutsu.
    My opinion is 50:50 over this. Need another mods input here.


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    I was tempted to DNR this off the bat for the simple reason that you submitted a weapon that makes you immune to genjutsu without even explaining why or even considering any kind of side effect or restriction. Also, regardless of the permission from Roku and Zero, this would eventually be equal to their own techniques. Not to mention that the low depth and description of it is not befitting of the whole concept. So, basic idea: make this better and more reasonable.

    P.s I would make the tones as seperate jutsus,if approved^^
    Custom weapon

    (akuma ha-pu)Demon harp
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short/long
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The demon harp is an ultimate illusiön weapon forged out of lies and deceit,physically its made from pure stainless steel but light in weight and is capable of conducting chakra,hence since one has to eject chakra into a target to bind them in an illusion,the harp absorbs any foreign chakra before it injects itself into the head of the wielder ,hence why the harp acts as a barrier against illusion attacks thrown at the wielder, whilst notifying him or her what kind of illusion it is.its strings are four in number and each strings produces different sharp tone when stroked. Each tone brands it's listeners with a particular type of illusion,though the tones itself its just to catch the targets attention before the illusion that comes along,takes effectBecause of it's portability and stylishness,the wielder is able to strap it unto his or her back,whilst in battle.

    -Note: The user can't perform handseals whilst holding the harp.
    - the harp blocks illusiön based attacks,except advanced ones(forbidden or ms illusions) whilst in the user's possession.
    -illusion shielding counts as one of 3 moves a turn and can only shield 3 times per match.
    -The user can only use one tone per turn.

    Zero --> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...49356&u2=51542
    Ruko--> http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...=5162&u2=51542
    P.s I would make the tones as seperate jutsus,if approved
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    DNR
    New submission

    (genjutsu-Kai no te) - illusion technique- hands of time
    Rank: A
    Type: supplementary
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs a snake handseal,whilst ejecting chakra into the brains of their foes nearby,making them think everything in their souroundings,including the user,as well as theirselves and everything the can see in general,has frozen(motionless),though it would seem like some kind of time manipulation jutsu was used,while infact,their vision of reality was paused and they were placed in a trance like state.
    -last for a turn
    -Once per battle
    -No s-rank and above genjutsu next turn.
    -Can affect multiple targets.
    _______________________________
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    Too high a rank and you need more than one handseal to induce such an effect...
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Raiton: Raiton ekō | Lightening Release: Lightening Echo
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: -
    Description: The user begins by creating a surge of lightening in both hands, they then spread their arms out to reach each side as far stretched as possible, they follow by forcefully bringing both hands in clapping together having both surges mix and due to the force they spread out sending electrical currents throughout the area. Having to cover the whole field this does not have much impact on the opponent from mid range onwards but its main purpose is to create the similar but louder sound effect of the Chidori but covering the whole area drowning out any other noises.
    - Short Range will leave the opponent paralyzed for 1 turn
    - Last for 4 turns
    - Only taught by Method
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    If it's only for sound purposes then i'm ok with it, but remove the paralysis part, if you include that it would be similar to the lightning mineralization technique that's cannon, anyway what is the use of it? distraction?


    Katon: hō-ō | Fire Release: Fenghuang
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: After learning the truth behind Itachi's past, Sasuke believed his hands to be that which would bring down justice upon Konoha, his ability to summon Hawks had led him to create a new jutsu aside Kirin & had created one that suited not only his desire but also his Uchiha heritage.
    The user begins by placing their hands together & performing the Bird handseal, they then begin parting their hands as a small orb of fiery light appears & takes the form of a bird, the bird then flies up rapidly toward the sky expanding in size. As it reaches the clouds they begin darkening having explosions spread throughout. A enormous blaze of fire shaped as a Hawk then comes racing down toward the field at an immense speed, it heads straight toward the target towering over them in both height & width having them unable to see anything but a bright orange light as it reaches within close range & as it hits a large explosion occurs burning anything within Mid-Range. The blaze is hot enough to evaporate small sources of water, the explosion rips apart the ground while leaving behind a trail of fire within Mid-Range .
    - Only usable by Sasuke Biographies
    - One turn must pass until the Hawk begins its descent
    - Only usable Once
    - Can only be dispelled by Large A Rank Water Jutsu +
    - Unable to use Fire Jutsu for two turns from creation
    - Can only be taught by Method
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    Overpowered, and why would a large hawk descend from the clouds? Kirin is made because lightning can be released from the thunderclouds, fire can't be released from the clouds nor materializes, it either comes out of your mouth, hands or the ground, so that voids your technique, and "immense speed" is a vague term, and large explosion burning anything within Mid range? is another, honestly i was going to DNR it because it's ridiculous, i'm gonna give you one chance to tone it down and make it reasonable.


    Raiton: Raiton Tsume| Lightening Release: Lightening Claw
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user begins by performing two handseals (Bird - Dragon), They then place both hands on the ground sending there Lightening chakra through the ground at a fast pace, as it reaches underneath the opponent it erupts through the ground in the shape of a Large clawed hand that surrounds the opponent & closes in clenching itself. The opponent is caught within it & is electrocuted leaving them paralyzed. A 1 meter gap is in between the hand & the target.
    - The opponent is paralayzed for 1 turn
    - Only taught by Method
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    Remove a "fast pace", define the exact size of the hand that erupts, remove the "&" and write it normally, how would the hand and the target have 1 meter gap if it's coming down from underneath them? make it useable twice per battle, and no lightning techniques can be used in the same turn as restrictions.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Serpent View Post
    (Kchuysei: Kyoudai Youi) Summoning: Dark Brother
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A (+20 toxic bite) (+5 per turn after bite)
    Description: Hei, after being accepted as family with the Eels of "Unagiirie", Hei was gifted with a Brother known as "Dark". Dark travels with Hei everywhere he goes, always being by his side. Dark can be seen coming forth from under Hei's coat in a similar fashion to kabuto's Snake. when in battle Dark acts as an extra limb for Hei. His main form of attack is biting with razor sharp and jagged teeth that have toxic saliva that poison's the wounds numbing the infected area. The toxin will spread through the opponents body slowly paralyzing them until the opponent is no longer able to move. Dark has very thick but flexible skin allowing it to block up to B-Ranked Taijutsu.
    Note:
    -Can only be used by Serpent's Hei Bio.
    -Toxic Bite counts as a move.
    -Takes 6 turns to paralyze the opponent.
    -Must sign Eel Contract.
    ♠ Declined ♠
    Alright, I can kind of imagine this, but I need you to be slightly more specific. You state short range, so can your snake only bite people at close range combat? Also, can he separate himself from Hei or not?
    Also, add the fact it can only stay on the field for four turns.


    Eel Contract Link: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post4233355
    (Kchuysei: Kyoudai Youi) Summoning: Dark Brother
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A (+60 toxic bite) (+5 per turn after bite)
    Description: After being accepted as family with the Eels of "Unagiirie", The Summoner is gifted with a Brother known as "Dark". Dark travels with the summoner whenever summoned, always being by it's summoners side. Dark can be seen coming forth from under it's summoners clothing in a similar fashion to kabuto's Snake, when in battle Dark acts as an extra limb for it's summoner. Being able to reach out to a Mid-Range area, his main form of attack is biting with razor sharp and jagged teeth that have toxic saliva that poison's the wounds numbing the infected area. The toxin will spread through the opponents body slowly paralyzing them until the opponent is no longer able to move. Dark has very thick but flexible skin allowing it to block up to B-Ranked Taijutsu. Dark is unable to leave It's summoners side as he is bound by the Eels Summoning Tattoo.
    Note:
    -Can only be used Once per battle
    -Last 4 turns
    -Requires a 2 turn cool down.

    -Toxic Bite counts as a move.
    -Takes 6 turns to paralyze the opponent.
    -Must sign Eel Contract.
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    define the exact size of the snake, make the biting and releasing toxin as an ability and limit it's usage, and give it a rank, remove the damage for the toxin it shouldn't involve any if it only paralysis.


    Eel Contract Link: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...=1#post4233355

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    (Genjutsu: Shishou no Jutsu) Illusion Technique: Master Technique
    Rank: C - S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 15 - 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will make the fallowing handseals "Dog-Ram-Tiger-Snake" for this Jutsu. This technique is simply the use of generic Genjutsu used by Genjutsu Masters. After using the proper handseals the user will place their opponent within a Genjutsu of their choosing.
    Note:
    -Can only be used twice per battle
    -Must have mastered Genjutsu
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    ______________________________
    ✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
    that can't be allowed.

    (Katon/Fuuton: Uchiha Iyoku) Fire/Wind Technique: Uchiha's Will
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 15 - 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will make a single handseal and release a powerful jet stream of wind that is difficult to detect because of it's intangibility. This wind has an highly concentrated and focused amount of fire chakra within it. Once this wind makes contact with it's target it will be forced to combustion causing it to burst out into flames that reach out and engulf everything within a short range area engulfing everything in it's wake. Doujutsu can see though this Technique easily.
    Note:
    -Can only be used twice per battle
    -Requires a 4 turn cool down
    -Can only be used by an Uchiha bio
    -Can only be taught by Serpent
    _________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    This requires Yin/Yang training, because wind and fire chakra according to your description are released at the same time, if it's a stream of wind then you need to apply wind chakra constantly to the stream, which means you can't add fire chakra while releasing wind chakra, remove the "intangibility" and make it visible to normal eyes, make it more reasonable.
     
         
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