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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Ƀeedo View Post
    ( Genjutsu: Kabe ni mirāmirā ) - Illusionary Arts: Mirror Mirror on the wall
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user releases his chakra towards his opponent using ANY, VALID, medium, such as earth, water, or even through a wind gust trapping him in a Genjutsu where the opponent sees a mirror coming out of the ground infront him. The mirror has the exact same reflection of the opponent's image, but the -Mirror Reflection of the opponent- is being controlled by the user himself. This Genjutsu is aimed to shock and affect the opponent's brain by releasing a huge amount of the user's chakra towards the opponent making him disorientated to such a degree that he starts to imitate his mirror reflection instead of it being the other way around. The user then is able to control the opponent's movements using the reflection for (5) seconds, before the disorientation effect fades away and the opponent starts to realize that he's in a Genjutsu. The user cannot use the same element he used as a Chakra channeling medium in the same turn, ( example; The user used a wind gust as a medium to channel the Genjutu's chakra to the opponent, then he may NOT use any wind technique in the same turn ).

    Note: Can only be used (2) times per battle, and each time has to be separated by at least (2) turns before using this technique again.
    Note: If the user made handseals for a technique, the opponent will make the same handseals but CANNOT create the attack unless it was in his Jutsu arsenal from the beginning.
    Note: After the (5) seconds, the opponent still needs to figure out that he's in a Gen before releasing himself from it.
    Note: Can only be taught by Ł Lawliet.

    ||Declined|| No to the bold.
    -Resubmitting-

    ( Genjutsu: Kabe ni mirāmirā ) - Illusionary Arts: Mirror Mirror on the wall
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user releases his chakra towards his opponent using ANY, VALID, medium, such as earth, water, or even through a wind gust trapping him in a Genjutsu where the opponent sees a mirror coming out of the ground infront him. The mirror has the exact same reflection of the opponent's image, but the -Mirror Reflection of the opponent- is being controlled by the user himself. This Genjutsu is aimed to shock and affect the opponent's brain by releasing a huge amount of the user's chakra towards the opponent making him disorientated to such a degree that he starts to imitate his mirror reflection instead of it being the other way around. The mirror reflection does NOT move a limb thus the opponent will stay paralyzed for a maximum of (1) turn, before the disorientation effect fades away and the opponent starts to realize that he's in a Genjutsu. The user cannot use the same element he used as a Chakra channeling medium in the same turn, ( example; The user used a wind gust as a medium to channel the Genjutu's chakra to the opponent, then he may NOT use any wind technique in the same turn ).

    Note: Can only be used (3) times per battle, and each time has to be separated by at least (1) turn before using this technique again.
    Note: Can only be taught by Ƀeedo.

    ~Declined~ First of all no long range genjutsu, and it's not approvable, because genjutsu doesn't allow you to control your opponent's movement, so this image imitating can't be done by normal genjutsu, using earth or water as a medium is considered an elemental genjutsu variation which is only allowed to NB genjutsu students, if you aren't one you have to put handseals, and one won't do, genjutsu doesn't do damage to the opponent's brain by adding chakra to it, the damage that genjutsu causes to the brain is mental trauma, which happens if the person who is inside the genjutsu is attacked and the attack connects, depends on how fatal the attack is which varies the mental trauma, but it doesn't cause damage to his brain just like that by adding large amounts of chakra, in my eyes i don't see this ever getting approved, but i'll give you one more chance to make it approvable, after that it will be a DNR.

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    ( Sakanade ) - Counter Stroke
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: Sakande is a sword that was crafted by an old man from Iwagakure village. In its sealed form, it resembles a normal katana. The hilt and sheath are red, and its guard is shaped like an hourglass. Using a specialy crafted bracelet for this sword only, it removes the seal and allows the sword to gain a special ability and change it's shape. The first few inches of the blade are covered by an extension of the crossguard. Sakanade's blade is straight and slim, with the tip ending in a slanted razor-like edge instead of being tapered to a point. There are five holes along the sword's length. The bracelet is made of a special type of magnet that once it's positioned inside the circular extension of the sword it creates a megnatic field in which it causes the sword to spin around either clock wise or counter clock wise depending on what the user wants as long as his hand stays in the circular extension of the sword. The ability of the sword is awakened when the user channels his pure chakra into the sword, and mumbles the word "Collapse", this causes the sword to start spinning counter clock wise and releasing the stored chakra towards the opponent(s) trapping him in an S-Rank, Long range Genjutsu where everything seems to be inverted for the opponent, making his right → left, and his up → down, and his back → front, and vice versa. The user can also spin the sword clock wise thus ending the Genjutsu.

    Note: The sword can be used as a normal Katana.
    Note: By default the User has (2) bracelets, one on each wrist.
    Note: If the Bracelets broke, then the seal cannot be broken in that battle, and the sword will only be used as a normal Katana.
    Note: The user needs to charge the sword with chakra before releasing the seal and using it's ability.
    Note: Charging takes a whole turn and counts towards the user's (3) allowed moves.
    Note: The user needs to mumble the word "Collapse" for the Sword to start spinning counter clock wise and release the Genjutsu chakra.
    Note: The Genjutsu can affect mutiple people at a time.
    Note: The Sword's ability can only be used (3) times per battle, with at least (2) turns break.
    Note: After the (2) turns break, the user needs to recharge the sword again before reusing it.
    Note: The Genjutsu lasts for (3) turns if the opponent didn't figure out that he's inside a Genjutsu.
    Note: Can only be used by Ƀeedo.

    Bracelet:

    Sword:
    Normal~

    Seal Removed~


    ~Declined~ No chakra infusable swords allowed, shape changing has been done countless times in various CWs, S-rank long range genjutsu? don't resubmit.

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    Summoning Animal: Glaucus atlanticus ( Blue Dragons/ Blue Ocean Slugs )
    Scroll Owner: Ƀeedo
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Description: The Glaucus atlanticus, also known as Blue Dragons, are rare sea creatures that fall under the Glaucidae ( Sea. It is silvery grey on its dorsal side and dark and pale blue ventrally. It has dark blue stripes on its face. It has a tapering body which is flattened and has six appendages which branch out into rayed cerata. Its radula bears serrated teeth on his blades. Blue Dragons can stay out of the water for long periods. It can both swim and float in the air, or crawl on the ground if needed. They are also -By nature- immune to most Venons and poisons. (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Glaucus_atlanticus).
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2L6kGwMfqwM
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    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A for now.
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A for now.]

    ~Leaving for Scorps~

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    ±± Declined ±±
    Slugs are cannon.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Suna Gosunkugi)- Sand spike
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description:
    Gaara condenses sand already on the battlefield and uses shape manipulation to create a spikes made out of sand. The size of this technique is dependent on how much sand is used technique can pierce through up to B-rank earth with no problem. The user can create one spike to an entire forest of spikes.
    Note: Can only be used by Gaara
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    Specify the size of each individual spike and the forest of spikes, i'd rather each be made into a separate technique, keep in mind that you have to get the sand under your opponent for it to work.
    (Suna Gosunkugi)- Sand spike
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description:
    Gaara condenses sand already on the battlefield and uses shape manipulation to create a spikes made out of sand. The size of this technique is dependent on how much sand is used technique can pierce through up to B-rank earth with no problem. The user can create from one spike to up to 5 maximum. Each spike has up to .5-meter diameter
    Note: Can only be used by Gaara

    ~Declined~ so you can form multiple spikes from an individual spike, and each of them covers a 5 meter's radius? i'm not getting what your trying to do, is it multiple spikes from a single spike, or a forest of spikes, 5 meter's radius for a single spike is too much regardless, it means that each of them covers a short range, so three of them can cover a long range, lol no.

    ( Futon: Kaze Ketsuretsu Genkotsu )- Wind Release: Wind Breakdown Fist
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short- Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user gathers a large amount of lifuton-based chakra around one of his fists and makes a punching motion at the target from which an oversized version of his fist, completely composed of condensed slicing wind chakra, is generated(which is about as large as the user himself) and rapidly fired towards the target. It has enough power to rip right through an opponent.
    Note: Usable thrice

    ~Declined~ No, i won't accept variations from other people's techniques even with their permission, if they want a variation they should post it themselves, otherwise i'm not going to approve it, i won't let that whole trend of Pervy's customs of the Dragon slayer arts happen again, also next time when you say you have permission for something, you should quote the technique that you asked permission for.

    Gained permission by Danzo Auditore De Firenze here
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 02-01-2013 at 02:26 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Glamdring | Ada-Kanadzuchi) – Glamdring | Foe-Hammer
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Glamdring is known as the Foe-Hammer, it is a two-handed sword forged in the depth of a mountain by the dwarves. It is the only blade of its kind, thought it was lost in the great shinobi world war. How Jiraiya came in possession of this sword is unknown. Its hilt and scabbard were decorated with small jewels and the hilt has a blue scarf around the hilt to please the hands of the wielder, also the hilt seems to have a little silver touch to it. The blade itself was described to have gold and white metal, thus could be told because of the metal being so reflective in the light. The blade was forged with the metal known as micro lattice which consists of an ultra-light form of metal foam which is incredible difficult to create. This metal made the blade known to everyone who wielded it and compared it to other blades to be “Light as a feather” in comparison, making it easier to wield in combat, even with one hand. Even though the blade is very light, the metal is still impressively strong and sharp. Glamdring is an ancient sword that holds great powers, and one of its most recognized abilities is its ability to recognize foreign chakra and will glow in a bright blue color when an attack is approaching the wielder of the blade. It is also known for its affinity towards water, being capable of using the wielders water chakra to surround the blade in thin layer of water which rotates around the blade incredible fast and due to the waters known ability to literally grind away earth over a long period of time, this sword has become capable of making this process much faster, into only a few seconds to grind away earth on impact. The water is also known for its ability to rust metal over a long period of time, combining this with the legendary Glamdring, it has become able to rust away metal on impact, though it is only strong enough to rust away regular weapons.
    Note:
    - The sword can grind and cut through B-rank or below earth jutsu with ease
    - The sword has the ability to rust away metals with the water
    - The swords ability to recognize an incoming attack, lighting up to warn the wielder is a passive ability which activates on its own
    - The user cannot use any S-rank or above Suiton techniques in the same round that he uses any of the swords abilities
    - The sword is strapped to the users back
    - The sword is indestructible due to its very strong and durable metal
    - The swords abilities count towards the users three moves
    - Only Gutsy Jiraiya can wield this blade

    Dropping CW: http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...02#post7852102 (Post 4#)

    ~Declined~ chakra infusable swords are not allowed, no to the lighting up when an attack is coming, that's not only unrealistic, but also means that the sword has sensing abilities, which i'm not going to approve anymore in any CW, rusting away metal doesn't happen in an instant, it needs to be in contact with the water for a LONG time, and there are metals that don't rust, so i'm not going to approve that ability, there are many things wrong with it, so i'll leave the editing and making it reasonable to you.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 02-01-2013 at 02:34 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Genjutsu: Shojishōgai | Illusionary Arts: Dysgraphia
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs a single handseal and places a dormant genjutsu upon the opponent. The genjutsu consists of tricking the opponents brain into suffering from Dysgraphia. Dysgraphia is a neurological deficiency that impairs the ability to write, same as basic motor skills. The inability to write is also referred to as Agraphia, which is a complete loss of ability to write and spell when writing. Also, persons with agraphia can't transform graphemes in written language. The impairment of motoric skills manifests in the inability of the victim to perform handseals properly, confusing them and not being able to place his hands correctly, which results in not being able to successfully mold chakra for the upcoming jutsu. The purpose of the genjutsu is to make the opponent unable to write seals for sealing techniques as well as other techniques that require seals and symbols to be written on scrolls in order to be performed, same as performing handseals. The genjutsu doesn't leave any traces, once performed, until the victim actually tries to perform any of the above mentioned methods, which is why it's considered dormant. With the inability to write proper seals, same as performing correct handseals, the opponent's attempt to perform such techniques would result in a fail which would then be the only clue that something is wrong with the opponents brain.
    Note: Usable only twice (2) per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this
    _________________________
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    Remove the dormant genjutsu, it tends to really mess up what's going on in the battle, i'd rather if it's a normally induced genjutsu, i won't accept any dormant genjutsus anyways, remove that it doesn't leave any traces, lets say you use a wind technique, then your opponent tries to form a fire technique and isn't able to, that would mess up the timeframe, i'm okay with the not being able to perform handseals while the genjutsu is active, but no dormant ones, so you need to rework the description, and add another restriction.
    Genjutsu: Shojishōgai | Illusionary Arts: Dysgraphia
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs a single handseal and places a genjutsu upon the opponent. The genjutsu consists of tricking the opponents brain into suffering from Dysgraphia. Dysgraphia is a neurological deficiency that impairs the ability to write, same as basic motor skills. The inability to write is also referred to as Agraphia, which is a complete loss of ability to write and spell when writing. Also, persons with agraphia can't transform graphemes in written language. The impairment of motoric skills manifests in the inability of the victim to perform handseals properly, confusing them and not being able to place his hands correctly, which results in not being able to successfully mold chakra for the upcoming jutsu. The purpose of the genjutsu is to make the opponent unable to write seals for sealing techniques as well as other techniques that require seals and symbols to be written on scrolls in order to be performed, same as performing handseals for techniques that require them. With the inability to write proper seals, same as performing correct handseals, the opponent's attempt to perform such techniques would result in a fail. The genjutsu lasts for 2 turns, unless the opponent frees himself by then. The opponent is still, however, capable of performing techniques that don't require handseals, and those that don't require writing seals in general.
    Note: No other genjutsu while this is active
    Note: Usable only twice (2) per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this

    ~Approved~ edited the last portion, from "the genjutsu ends once the opponent fails to perform a technique using any of the above mentioned methods", and replaced it with lasting for 2 turns per use, i think this is better, also added a bit to the description, if your not satisfied with the changes i made tell me and i'll decline it.

    Suiton: Mizu Setsuzoku | Water Style: Water Connection
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid (Long)
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs two (2) handseals and channels water chakra into his dominant hand. As the water forms, a thin layer of water appears on his hand and he directs it towards an already existing water technique or water source. From his hand, a thin rod of water (1-2 inch) expands quickly and connects with the technique or source. As it gets in contact with the technique or source the user regains control of it and becomes able to control its movement by moving his hand while maintaining the connection with the rod. The thin rod will act like a solid connection between the user and the water technique or water source, allowing the user to fuel more chakra into the technique in order to change its shape using shape manipulation. The connection itself doesn't deal any damage, but instead, adopts the damage of the connected technique. The user can also coat a sword while holding it in his hand, which will expand the reach of the rod up to long rage. The user can abort the connection with the connected technique or source, instantly.
    Note: Usable only twice (2) per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can teach this

    ~Declined~ Sorry, not going to allow this lol, don't resubmit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Fuuton: Wa Shigusa: ) Wind Release : Hoop Action
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user begins by focusing his wind chakra into his waist. Once focused, the user begins to rotate his hips in a circular fashion, similar to when one is twirling a hula hoop around their waist. A white glow begins to appear the users waist, due to the high concentration of wind chakra. The user by using shape manipulation, shapes the chakra to form a spinning ring, around their waist. The user releases the chakra, causing the ring to fly across, slicing the enemy in two.

    Note:
    -Can only be used three times in one battle
    -Can only be taught by -Cerberus-

    ~Declined~ mention the size of the ring and that it's visible to the naked eye, also mention how thin it is lol

    Raiton: Sono Bu-to): Lightning Release: The Boot
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user begins by focusing his lightning chakra above the opponent. Once gathered the user uses shape manipulation to shape the chakra into a large boot that forms above the opponent's head. Once the boot is formed the user manipulates the boot to drop on the opponent from above with such speed and force causing severe damage. The action is similar to a human stamping on a insect. The boot is 6 meters in height and width.
    Note:
    -Can only be used two times in one battle
    -Can only be taught by -Cerberus-

    ~Declined~ How exactly is the lightning released? lightning can't materialize, there has to be a medium to release it, like clouds, the earth, or your body. fire is also the same, only element that is materialized is water, wind isn't materialized you simply use your chakra to compress and influence the surrounding air.

    Kyuuten Senshu- Heavens Bow
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 ( 40 if the user creates a net)
    Description: Heavens Bow was crafted by -Cerberus- many years ago. The bow itself is a silver bow made from a unknown but indestructible metal. The bow is sharp on each end, making it useful to stab opponents if they reach short range. If the hands of another person touches Heavens Bow, a
    The bow's string is made from a rare material that, draws lightning chakra from the users hands, creating lightning arrows. The arrows are created when the user pulls back the string, causing a arrow created from lightning to zip across the terrain, piercing its targets cleanly. The user has the option to use shape manipulation to change the shape of the arrow, into a average sized lightning net that can be used to trap and paralyze the opponent. The net is big enough to trap a full grown man.

    Restrictions:
    -Can only use lightning jutsu's if wielding the bow.
    -The usage of this bow, takes the slot of one of three jutsu's slot per turn.
    -Usable only 5 times per battle-
    -Can only be wielded by -Cerberus-



    ~Declined~ I think the description is messing a part there after the "a" lol, and chakra infusable arrows can't be made, that's patented by Mathias's Sniper Arts CFS, it doesn't mean you can't have a bow as a CW, it means that the bow can't fire chakra enhanced arrows.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Ĺight View Post
    Resubmitting

    (Katon: x-ba-na-)| Fire Release: X-Burner
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Mid-Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: For this technique, the user will extend his/her hands forward, focusing a large amount of Katon chakra. The user will then condense/charging this chakra into both of their palms. The user will then use two of their jutsu slots to make sure that their chakra is evenly charged in both arm or this won't work. Because of the strength of this technique, the user has to put one hand behind them, and then the other hand to release the stream. The user will turn to their side, achieving perfect symmetry then they will yell "X-Burner" releasing the large mass of flame from both arms. The arm that is facing away from the opponent is not to attack, but for support or-else the user would be sent flying because of the extreme pressure from the arm they fired the technique. The x-burner is a beam of pure fire chakra that is sent toward the opponent in one direction which means it can be easily avoided, but does extensive damage if it makes a direct hit. [B]This beam is about 4 meters in width.

    Drawbacks and notes:

    -When the user uses this technique, the user can't use ANY katon techniques for the Next 2 turns
    -User becomes very tired because of the extensive amount of chakra used and can hardly move
    -The user must stay stationary when using
    -No s-ranks the same turn and the turn after this technique is used
    -After this is used, the user becomes sluggish, not moving as fast as they did before, their speed is cut by half.
    -Can only be fired once.
    -Can only be used by Light...


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    remove a "restriction" and edited a few stuff, removed destroying everything in it's path, 2 meters in width means it's rather a small beam so i made it 4 instead, not as big as you might think, keep in mind that if someone is hit by the fire used for stability he won't suffer any kind of damage or even be blasted away, also keep in mind that "using" two of your jutsu slots means it counts as 2 moves.


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    ( Sution: Makishimamu Ba-suto )| Water Release: Maximum Burst
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range:Mid-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: For this technique, the user focuses a large mass of suiton chakra into their hands. The user will then place their hands together as if they were performing ' Storm release: Laser Circus' (didn't know how to describe the way the hands are put together >_<), channeling the chakra allowing it to surround their hand. After this step has been done, the user will then yell 'Go!' releasing this bird like wave. The wave spreads out to about 3 meters, still leaving a trace on the users hand, this allowing them to move it to attack. The technique is allowed to make one turn, but take time.

    -Must have mastered Suiton
    -No Fire techniques the time this is used
    -Must be Sannin Rank or higher to use
    -Usable 2x
    -Can only be taught by Colonello...
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    ✘ Declined ✘
    remove the colored lol, what do you mean by no fire techniques the time this is used? o_O


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    ( Genjutsu : Osanago jikoku ) | Illusionary Arts: Baby time!
    Rank:B
    Type: Supplamentary
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:20
    Damage:40
    Description: For this technique, the user sends their chakra into the opponent's brain, thus sending them into the genjutsu. This genjutsu attacks the opponent eyesight, allowing them to see a special phenomenon. The user of the Gen would shrink down and become a baby. The user who would 'seem' to be a baby by the opponent would stay the same, only people who are caught in the gen would see otherwise. As no one would forcefully attack a young and helpless baby, the user will have a chance, but their are some drawback with this. As the user wants this to seem real, the user is only allowed to use Mid- Short rage techniques while the opponent is under this genjutsu, the user will not be allowed to use any taijutsu while this is active. When the user talks, the opponent will hear babies wining.

    -Stays active for two turns if not broken
    -Once deactivated, can't be used for another 2 turns
    -No Long range techniques or Taijutsu when technique is active
    -Can only be taught by Colonello....
    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    What the........... you can't make your opponent unable to attack you by using genjutsu, don't resubmit. EVER!!
    Resubmitting

    ( Sution: Makishimamu Ba-suto )| Water Release: Maximum Burst
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range:Mid-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: For this technique, the user focuses a large mass of suiton chakra into their hands. The user will then place their hands together as if they were performing ' Storm release: Laser Circus', channeling the chakra allowing it to surround their hand. After this step has been done, the user will then yell 'Go!' releasing this bird shaped wave. The wave spreads out to about 3 meters in diameter, still leaving a trace on the users hand, however it doesn't mean that the user is able to redirect the bird shaped wave after the initial trajectory it takes.

    -No Fire techniques the turn this is used
    -Usable 2x
    -Can only be taught by Ĺight

    ~Approved~ Edited a bit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    (Genjutsu/Ninjutsu: Itachi Ken ) Illusion/Ninja Arts: Skunk Stung

    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs 1 handseal, casting a genjutsu on the area around (Mid-range). The genjutsu has a high impact but is very short-lived. It will induce a death/damage-like experience, which will trigger an immediate response of "vanishment" or "release", it's effects added by the shock factor and the usage of physical chakra as a guidance. While on normal opponents it will have no real or significant effect, when used on clones or summoned animals, it will make them experience an impact intense enough to reflexively reverse them or vanish them. Even if the targeted opponents are linked together by a chakra-exchanging techniques, the short-peak of this technique will still follow through. The one handseal can be kept for more than one usage. This is to double the effect, as multi-layered genjutsu or for a more focused/concentrated approach (reaching up to Long-Range). Any clone technique or summoning animals lower than A rank will be efficiently affected by the wide-spread usage of the technique. Summons A rank and above will require an individualized concentrated casting (thus spending 1 jutsu per animal). Summons ranked Boss (allowing for a current king and/or a queen, if fit) will require both an individualized and a double-layered usage (regardless of the rank).
    *Requires 1 turn between usages*

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    Idea is ok but range...no. Mid range max. Also, Genjutsu can't be casted on an area. It needs specific targets. I don't get also why you have the ninja art part added. It seems to be a simple genjutsu all together. However, its applications on Shadow Clones... We saw when Itachi put Kakashi's shadow clone in a genjutsu that they are left unaffected by some genjutsu so you might need to explain that part a bit better. But the core idea seems ok.
    (Genjutsu/Ninjutsu: Itachi Ken ) Illusion/Ninja Arts: Skunk Stung

    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user performs 1 handseal, casting a genjutsu on up to 4 targets in the area around (Mid-range). The genjutsu has a high impact but is very short-lived. It will induce a death/damage-like experience, which will trigger an immediate response of "vanishment" or "release", it's effects added by the shock factor and the usage of physical chakra as a guidance. While on normal opponents it will have no real or significant effect, when used on clones or summoned animals, it will make them experience an impact intense enough to reflexively reverse them or vanish them. Even if the targeted opponents are linked together by a chakra-exchanging techniques, the short-peak of this technique will still follow through. The one handseal can be kept for more than one usage. This is to double the effect, as multi-layered genjutsu or for a more focused/concentrated approach. Any clone technique or summoning animals lower than A rank will be efficiently affected by the wide-spread usage of the technique. Summons A rank and above will require an individualized concentrated casting (thus spending 1 jutsu per animal). Summons ranked Boss (allowing for a current king and/or a queen, if fit) will require both an individualized and a double-layered usage (regardless of the rank).
    *The genjutsu part pertains to infiltrate the mind and guide the ninjutsu chakra, while producing the death/damage-like experience. The ninjutsu part is guided by the genjutsu, further enhancing it's penetration on the opponent's mind (Even shadow clones) and enhancing the effects, relaying a physical response (vanishming or release of the technique).*
    *Requires 1 turn between usages, excluding a double layer*

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    ±± Pending ±±


    Approved Box Contract

    ( Kouton: Yari ) Box Arts: Woomera

    Rank: A
    Rank: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: Allows the user to summon several (up to 10) isolated nematocysts, of various sizes (from the tiny pin-sized nemoticysts of normal boxes to the massive spear/staff sized nematocysts of gigantic boxes). These can be wielded like weapons or thrown like projectiles (in the same manner as one throws kunais or shurikens). The user claps his hands and summons the nematocysts in front of him or in his palms, grabbing them to use. The nematocysts have only one autonomy, if the tips are stimulated, the injection mechanism is triggered, sending an infusion of Box venom directly related with the size of the nematocyst, otherwise, they're innanimate.
    *charging chakra through the nematocysts while physically wielding them allows them to gain a certain steel-like quality, like a sword or a kunai. Throwing them or loosing physical contact will rever them back to soft organic material*
    *triggering mechanism allows only one infusion, aftewards the namotocyst is reverse summoned*
    *human summoners are more resistant but not immune to the venom*
    *Can only be used once every 2 turns*
    *Range pertains to the range of the summoning of the nematocysts and not their throwing, which is the same as the range at which the user can throw a kunai*

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    ±± Approved ±±
    Edited to make approvable. If you don't like it you can resubmit. I removed the use from Boxes because if they used it like this, all boxes would gain an A-Rank defense since they are virtually covered in nematocysts or can be by the use of their tentacles.

    (Katon/Fuuton: Ikusen no Houou) Fire/Wind Release: The Squad of the Scorching Falcons
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This technique consists in two different steps, which can be preformed simultaneously, using an ally, or in a quick succession. The first part consist in stringing together 4 handseals before spitting a huge quantity of seriously hot ashes, which will then burst into an hellish flock of about 10-15 bird-like ash structures. The birds will fly out in different directions, some will fly high into the sky, while others (Only a few 2-3) will attack the opponent(s) directly.
    The second part of the jutsu consists in preforming 3 handseals. The first will quickly gather air around each individual bird. The second will concentrate the gathered wind into the ash-hawks, which will make them burst ablaze. At that point, the birds will be sharper and faster, aswell as hotter. The third handseal will make all of the birds fall onto the opponent. Much like real birds of prey, the free-falling bird-structures will acquire great speeds, and will violently explode upon impact (At the scale of a Paper Bomb induced Explosion). The few birds that directly attacked the opponent will simple burst outwards, burning anything close to them.
    *This jutsu can only be done once per battle*
    *The user will the ability to call forth Fire or Wind Chakra to preform techniques higher than B rank in the turn after usage, higher than A in the next and higher than S in next*
    *The user will suffer a damage loss of 20 damage points*


    Approved

    Ressubmitting (Too restricted)

    (Katon/Fuuton: Ikusen no Houou) Fire/Wind Release: The Squad of the Scorching Falcons
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This technique consists in two different steps, which can be preformed simultaneously, using an ally, or in a quick succession. The first part consist in performing one handseal charging chakra in a point on the battle field which will turn into seriously hot ashes, which will then burst into an hellish flock of about 10-15 bird-like ash structures. The birds will fly out in different directions, some will fly high into the sky, while others (Only a few 2-3) will attack the opponent(s) directly. The second part of the jutsu consists in preforming an additional handseal. This will quickly gather air around each individual bird, concentrating the gathered wind into the ash-hawks, which will make them burst ablaze. At that point, the birds will be sharper and faster, aswell as hotter. While keeping the handseal, the user is able to make them all flock down on the target. Much like real birds of prey, the free-falling bird-structures will acquire great speeds, and will violently explode upon impact (At the scale of a Paper Bomb induced Explosion). The few birds that directly attacked the opponent will simple burst outwards, burning anything close to them. Entailed with this technique is the ability to induce heat on a certain substance, instead of creating ash, and quickly provide wind/oxygen all the same. This will induce a powerful combustion reaction on the substance, vanishing it whole and turning it into it's combustion gasesous byproducts (example, hydrogen into water)
    *The user loses the ability to call forth Fire or Wind Chakra to preform techniques higher than S rank in the turn after usage*

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    ±± Approved ±±
    Don't forget to notify whomever might have use of this technique so that they get the new version.
     
         
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    (Suiton: Aku****suna jū) Water Style: Vicious Gun
    Type:offensive
    Rank:C-Rank
    Range:Short-Mid Range
    Chakra:15 Chakra
    Damage:30 Damage
    Description: after preforming the Ram → Tiger the user focuses his suiton chakra into his both hands and after he puts enough amount of chakra his hands will get wet like they're just out of water the he launches many small water balls from his hands the water balls when they hit a solid thing they turn into chakra-infused highly- vicious water the same as (Water Style: Starch Syrup Capture Field), the water of each ball covers only a small area
    note: only usable 5 times per battle
    note: must have 2 turns cool between each usage time
    note: can only be taught by FeeLPaiN
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    If it traps the opponent, why is there damage points? mention the size of the balls.
    resubmitting

    (Suiton: Nensei gan) Water Style: Viscous Gun
    Type:offensive
    Rank:C-Rank
    Range:Short-Mid Range
    Chakra:15 Chakra
    Damage:N/A
    Description: after preforming the Ram → Tiger the user focuses his suiton chakra into his both hands and after he puts enough amount of chakra his hands will get wet like they're just out of water the he launches many fist-sized water balls "up to 5" from his hands the water balls when they hit a solid object they turn into chakra-infused highly- viscous water the same as (Water Style: Starch Syrup Capture Field), the water of each ball covers only a small area of 3 meters in radius
    note: the user can shot up to 3 balls per turn
    note: only usable 5 times per battle
    note: must have 2 turns cool between each usage time
    note: can only be taught by FeeLPaiN

    ~Approved~ Edited a bit, keep in mind you can only release up to 5 balls max like i mentioned, with each of them breaking down to a 3 meter's wide area of water, so all equals 15 meters = mid range.

    (Raiton: Kaminari Senbon) Lightning Release: Lightning Senbon
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: C-Rank
    Range: Short Range
    Chakra: 15 Chakra
    Damage: 30 Damage
    Description: after preforming Snake handseal the user focuses his raiton chakra into his back, then by using shape manipulation. The user shape the raiton chakra as senbons of lightning. After this the user releases them from his back at his opponent. the lightning is very dense as it do the damage of normal senbons with the shocking damage of raiton-based attacks
    Note: can be used 5 times per battle
    Note: only FeeLPaiN can teach this Jutsu

    ~Declined~ Rip off of Chidori Senbon technique, i don't see how it is different other than it comes out of your back lol, Chidori senbon is even better.
     
         
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    (Kuro Ito Gizagiza Domu) – Dark Threads Jagged Spears
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: Kakuzu channels chakra through the dark threads within a specific limb in his body to cause countless spikes (which are each a meter in length) to extend from the chosen limb e.g. hand, foot, leg or arm. The spikes resemble basic spears in both shape and width and will skewer through the bodies of shinobi who come into contact with them. After use, the spikes re-enter the user's body and the holes created in the user's limb by the technique are sewn up. This jutsu’s main purpose is to be used in conjunction with Taijutsu attacks, allowing them to be much more severe on contact.

    Note: Can only be used Thrice per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
    Note: Can only be Taught by Negative Knight

    ~Approved~

    Quote Originally Posted by Negative Knight View Post
    (Kuro Ito Gizagiza Kyuuzou) – Dark Threads Stalactite Surge
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60 (-30 damage to the user)
    Description: Kakuzu channels chakra through the dark threads within his body and releases it all at once, to cause countless spikes (which are 5 meters in length) to extend from his chest, back and arms. The spikes resemble basic spears in both shape and width and the end result makes the user look like they’re coated in an armour of spikes. Anyone hit by this technique is skewered through their body and the technique is capable of impaling multiple enemies and clones. After release, the spikes re-enter the user's body and the holes created in the user's body by the technique are sewn up. The initial pain to the user is the equivalent of being stabbed multiple times and is capable of breaking A-Rank and below Genjutsu

    Note: Can only be used Twice per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
    Note: Can only be Taught by Negative Knight



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    I was okay with everything until that whole pain releasing from genjutsu thing, releasing threads doesn't really make Kakuzu feel pain, take the relation to genjutsu out and should be good to go, remove also the "clones" reference.

    -Resubmitting-

    (Kuro Ito Gizagiza Kyuuzou) – Dark Threads Stalactite Surge
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: Kakuzu channels chakra through the dark threads within his body and releases it all at once, to cause countless spikes (which are 5 meters in length) to extend from his chest, back and arms. The spikes resemble basic spears in both shape and width and the end result makes the user look like they’re coated in an armour of spikes. Anyone hit by this technique is skewered through their body. After release, the spikes re-enter the user's body and the holes created in the user's body by the technique are sewn up.

    Note: Can only be used Twice per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
    Note: Can only be Taught by Negative Knight




    ~Approved~

    No bolded changes because i removed things.

    Quote Originally Posted by Negative Knight View Post
    (Kuro Ito Roiyaru Koujou) – Dark Threads Royal Siege
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Kakuzu places both of his palms on the ground and feeds a large mass of dark threads straight into the ground at an astonishing speed. Within seconds, the underground of the terrain is infested with a network of dark threads infused with the user’s own chakra. Straight after creation, the user detaches themselves from the created source. The underground network extends to a 50 meter radius around the position the user first casts the jutsu. This allows the user to manipulate the dark threads directly from the terrain itself to perform various jutsus. However, it is highly chakra taxing to maintain the source of chakra infused threads, resulting in a steady depletion of chakra every turn the technique is active. Once the technique is cancelled the underground source of threads can no longer be manipulated.

    Note: Must have Dark Threads active
    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
    Note: Can only be Used by Negative Knight
    __________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Too broad, how is this going to affect traveling through the earth? and Earth techniques used through the terrain, an earth technique like the Rising Earth Excavation or Destructive Rising Rock Pillars will render your technique useless, and 50 meters is too much, up to 20 meters and that's it, which is considered a long range, remove that whole "astonishing speed", and mention that you can't use this technique itself to attack the opponent, make it last up to 4 turns max.
    -Resubmitting-

    (Kuro Ito Roiyaru Koujou) – Dark Threads Royal Siege
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Kakuzu places both of his palms on the ground and feeds a large mass of dark threads straight into the ground. Within seconds, the underground of the terrain is infested with a network of dark threads infused with the user’s own chakra. Straight after creation, the user detaches themselves from the created source. The underground network extends to a 20 meter radius around the position the user first casts the jutsu. This allows the user to manipulate the dark threads directly from the terrain itself to perform various jutsus, however this jutsu can't be used to attack the opponent directly. Once the technique is cancelled the underground source of threads can no longer be manipulated. Whilst this jutsu is active, underground travel is impossible as the user/opponent will become tangled in a dense mass of threads if they attempt to do so. Furthermore, Earth techniques which affect/devastate the terrain will render this jutsu useless as the source of threads will be destroyed in the process.

    Note: Lasts for Four turns
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
    Note: Can only be Used by Negative Knight



    ~Declined~ I was just going to approve it then i saw the "twice" per battle thing, that's a definite no, supplementary techniques like this can only be used once, also add another restriction that says you can't use threads from your body anymore, as long as this is active, because all of the threads are released underground, an amount of threads that covers 20 meters are quite a massive one, unless you have fuuinjutsu or something and can summon other threads, like i told you before it's a bad idea, but needs those kind of restrictions.

    Removed "Must have Dark Threads active"

    Removed chakra cost in place of a turn limit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Jūkenpō/Suiton: Aoigekimi - Gentle Fist Style/Water Style: Blue Blow Body
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Point: 80
    Description: This is an advance variant of the original "One Blow Body Jyûken style" where instead of expelling raw chakra from every 361 tenketsu of the body, Priest will manipulate and modyfies his chakra by expelling water chakra from his whole tenketsus. the aftermath of the jutsu expunges wet blueish chakra from every sweatpore of the skin. This carries a bit more force than its prototype and can blast away obstacles short range of the user. The chakra however has a blueish color and filled with moisture.
    Note:
    ++Must be from the Hyugga Clan
    ++Useable only thrice per match
    ++No S-rank Jyûken in the same turn

    ~Declined~ Rip off of the technique you mentioned, the One blow body, don't resubmit.

    Genjutsu: Waga Honmei Jibutsu - Illusion Style: My Favourite Things
    Type: Sup
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Point: N/A
    Description: The target/s is/are lured in a genjutsu after 3 handseals where they find themselves in a dreamworld (Totally white environment which looks like a flash light is been used) filled with floating fluffy Golden teddy bears. The teddy bears glow with entraping glare making the opponents be forcibly filled with toughts of their childhood, their toys, playpen, they want to make a sand castle, walk naked and even cry. Their feeling is mesmerized and emotions enchanted making them feel like touching the soft and furry skin of the hovering teddies, grab them to their bossom and cuddle it till they fall asleep. In real life, opponent/s are in a dormant state, pertrified and goes into a deep sleep after 2 turns.
    Note
    ++Can Affect more than one target
    ++Useable Thrice per match
    ++No S-rank Genjutsu in the turn or next
    ++ Must be taught by Priest
    ++Opponent stays paralysed for two turns in which they fall asleep after that.

    ~Declined~ *Sigh* people aren't getting how genjutsu is used these days, genjutsu can't force your opponent to do anything, that's an ability of Sharingan genjutsu only, so that basically voids the genjutsu, needs rewording, no i won't let it affect multiple people, S-rank is too much, using 3 times for an S-rank is too much as well.

    Raiton: Raikou Onjou - Lightning Release: Lightning Tame
    Rank: D-Forbidden
    Type: Defense/Attack/Sup
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 10-50
    Damage point: 20-90
    Description: This is an advanced kind of redirection jutsu whereby the user contains a lightning jutsu and sends it back. The user creates a transluscent bubble of lightning on one of his hand or both depending on the rank of the lightning he wants to absorb(one hand for lightninng up to B-rank, both hands for A-rank and above). The amount of chakra imbued in the bubble depends on the rank of the raiton he wants to absorb. He then captures the jutsu in his hands, neutralising the opponent chakra turning it to raw lightning as he mixes his own chakra while he shape manipulates it to its initial form or any form he wants and sends it back in the incident direction it came with the same speed and power. However this cannot be done on unfocused lightning such as Nagashi.
    Bubble can increase in area according to the size of the lightning to be absorbed.
    -Note-
    ++User is only allowed capture and send-back:
    F-rank Lightning only once
    S-rank Lightning only twice
    A-rank only thrice
    That is, once the user uses this jutsu on F-rank once, he can't use it on F-ranks again through out the match and suffers the consequencies of using it before he can use it again on lower level lightnings.
    This is the same to other S-rank, when used twice, the user can't use it on S-ranks again and so on for restricted ranks.
    ++No S-rank Lightning in the turn and the next (for S-rank and above useage).
    ++For F-rank useage, +30 damage to the user due to chakra strain and hands won't be useable for 2 turns

    ~Declined~ I'm not allowing elemental absorbing techniques, nor multiple ranks. don't resubmit.
     
         
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    (Katon/Raiton: E3) - Fire/Lightning Release: E3
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90 (-20 to user)
    Description: E3 which stands for Extreme Element Effect is an incredibly powerful long-range technique, that results in a hugely destructive and widespread blast, formed from the combined generation of enormous amounts of both fire and lightning. In order to perform such a devastating attack, not only a great deal of energy but also the establishment and strict enactment of a rather long complex process is required.
    User engulfs both of his arms, one after another, one in fire and another in lightning element which produces visible manifestations of the powers involved from the hands. The user then proceeds to aim his hands towards his intended target, signaling his brain to fire. Large beams, one from each hand emanates, combining together to form sort of bluish flame which travels rapidly towards the intended target, which upon impact intermingle and create a massive explosion, incinerating everything.

    Note: -User can't aim his hands in separate locations, but at a single target.
    -User takes 20 damage from the technique on his hands, reducing the speed of handseals to half for 2 turns, including the one in which this technique is used.
    -User cannot use his hands to use any taijutsu above B-rank for 2 turns.
    -Cannot use any fire or lightning above A-rank in same turn.
    -Cannot use any fire or lightning technique above S-rank in next turn.
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ don't resubmit.
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    (Suiton: HornBill) - Water Release: HornBill
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: E-A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 05-30
    Damage Points: N/A (+1 rank to water technique)
    Description: Right after using any water technique, user uses the environment to his advantage and bends the specific water molecules around the water technique towards itself, which increases the volume of water technique to some extent, making it stronger, and also allows the user to bend those water molecules in a way that its shape can be manipulated (regular spherical ball can be shape manipulated into dragon head etc)

    Note: -Rank of this technique depends, and is same as of the water technique on which it is used.
    -Cannot be used to strengthen S-rank or F-rank water techniques.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ no multiple ranks, no elemental boosting techniques, don't resubmit.
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    (Kame Ninjutsu: Kame Atogama No Jutsu) - Turtle Style: Turtle Replacement Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This technique allows the user to switch his position with any turtle by performing the summoning technique. User and the turtle starts performing the series of 5 handseals and perform summoning technique by slamming their respective hands on ground, the moment both simultaneously slam their hands on ground, the user summons the turtle to his place and turtle summons the user to his place, exchanging their positions.

    Note: -Can only be used if a turtle is present on the battlefield.
    -Can only be used, if user has signed turtle (or any other specie of it) contract.
    -Since its a Turtle Ninjutsu, it can only be used by the user and turtle or turtle and turtle.
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.

    Link to approved contract

    ~Declined~ That's not substitution, that's space-time ninjutsu, don't resubmit.
     
         
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    (Olm Kuchiyose no jutsu: No musuko Kōjin) - Olm Summoning Technique: Son of Kōjin.
    Type: Attack/Supplementary/Defensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long (Summoned in Short range)
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80 (For S-rank move) 60 (For A-rank Fire+Slime jutsus)
    Description: One of the sons of the great Olm who is deemed God of Fire, a proud Olm who is proud of his fathers name and calls himself son of Kōjin, rather than his actual name, Kojiki, a name which very few know. Kojiki is roughly the same height as a human and is able to stand on his two back legs as his 'tail' rests flat on the ground. He is able to speak English and respects his summoner and whatever needs his summoner may have of him. Kojiki has very distinct and powerful Fire jutsus which have never been seen by other Olms. He has the ability to use Fire jutsus up to A-rank, however, he adds slime to the Fire before releasing it, allowing it to become more viscous, almost like Lava allowing it to have more resistance to Water jutsus as the viscosity of the slime is able to overcome the water. This makes it so that fire jutsus gain an extra resistant to water jutus, meaning the water jutsu would have to be the same rank as the Fire used by Kojiki in order to neutralize it. The Olm has also got his own special Slime related Fire jutsu in which he aims his mouth at the sky, spitting out 20 small yet quick marbles of slime which have his fire chakra within them, no more than a second later, those small marbles of Slime begin to come down at a bigger size of tennis balls, raining down, creating craters which are about half a meter deep at each point they land. These Fire infused Slime balls also have an increased resistant to water and over the whole jutsu is equivalent to an S-rank. Like all other Olms, Kojiki has a sense of smell which is equal to that of a dog from the Inuzuka clan and hearing easily comparable to someone who may have C-ranked sound jutsu Inner hearing skill activated.
    Note: Can be summoned twice.
    Note: Lasts 3 turns each time.
    Note: All his moves count towards the users 3 moves.
    Note: His S-rank move can only be used 2 times a battle.

    ~Declined~ The main ability makes no sense, fire can't have a sticky liquid added to it, it doesn't have a physical trait like water or lava does, and because the slime is sticky it has a physical mass obviously, when you attempt to add slime to the fire, all that's going to happen is the slime being evaporated, furthermore, there's a reason to why Water is stronger than fire, because when the fire collides to the water, it becomes quite hard to break the Hydrogen and Oxygen molecules and separate them from one another, adding slime to the fire wouldn't make that change, it will only make the water that it collides with more sticky, also you should remove the reference to sound with the hearing, i find having the smell of an Inuzuka dog is enough, make him summoned once and stays for 4 turns on the field.

    (Olm Genjutsu: Ikkō & Ikki's Fukushū ) - Olm Genjutsu Technique: Ikko & Ikki's revenge.
    Type: Attack/Supplementary/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: A simple genjutsu which requires the user to summon 2 Olms who have trained themselves to be genjutsu specialists in their home land. This jutsu requires the use to either slam his hands down or stomp on the ground to summon these 2 Olms. Upon being summoned the twin Olms can release their chakra into the opponents brain whilst they zig zag around each other, catching the opponent in a visual genjutsu where he then suddenly feels another Olm is suddenly clutching his chest tightly (Olms have hands) as it's slime covers his whole body, slowly travelling downwards, all while the other two make their way towards him with quick haste, before slowly travelling past the slime which was made to cover his body by the big Olm 'summoned' at his back, and into his mouth, causing him gag as he's having breathing problems, all whilst he's struggling to move from his position due to the size of the Olm and the sticky slime it's holding him down with. Furthermore, the opponent's hearing would also be disturbed, only allowing him to hear the squelching of the slime which droops downwards, the heavy breathing of the Olm standing beside him and the Olm's hot breath on his back as it carries on clutching him extremely tightly. However, in reality, the two Olms summoned simply disperse back into their land, as soon as they've caught their opponent in this genjutsu.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.
    Note: No other Olm jutsu in the next turn.

    ||Declined|| The hearing loss makes zero sense. Remove it.

    (Olm No jutsu: Ashigaru's Fureru ) - Olm Technique: Ashigaru's Touch.
    Type: Attack/Supplementary/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60 (If opponent makes contact) (-10 to Olm)
    Description: A infamous technique among all Olms, this jutsu allows the user to add his Fire chakra into the outer layer of Slime covering the body of Olms and heat it up to a point where that Olm becomes untouchable due to the heat that it's producing from its body. This jutsu is able to heat up any and every layer of slime on the battlefield. This gives the user an advantage if his Olm is fighting a taijutsu based summon or someone has made physical contact with the slime. In additon, it also gives the Olm more resistance against Water jutsus as it's able to evaporate up to B-rank water jutsus as well as allowing Olms resistance to S-rank Wind due to the amount of fire chakra that's channelled into the slime, making it an extra shield of fire.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times.
    Note: No other Olm jutsus Next turn.

    ~Declined~ Won't allow something like that, don't resubmit.

    Approval of Olms: http://narutobase.net/forums/showthr...=1#post7135287
     
         
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    (Genjutsu: Kaiyō atsuryoku) -
    Illusion arts: Oceanic pressure

    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    The user first does a small sequence of hand seals (3) which acts as a medium for the user to insert chakra into his opponents brain/chakra system. Once that is done the user gets control over majority of the opponents senses, touch, sound, smell and sight. The second the genjutsu is casted the victim begins seeing and hearing massive amounts of water flow out of thin air (like storm upheaval) from every direction. In nearly an instant the entire battle field would be turned into a huge ocean in which the opponents are at the bottom of. Due to the high pressure of being so deep in the water would begin "crushing" the opponents and completely restricting their movements whilst in reality they're just standing there frozen in place.


    - Only taught by william24
    - Can be casted on multiple opponents
    - Only usable 2x per battle

    ~Declined~ First i won't allow a single genjutsu technique to affect 4 senses at the same time, that shouldn't be mentioned anyway, sometimes it's mentioned for clarifications, and the feature of the genjutsu is already attempted by Serpent, so this is a rip off of his CJ that he submitted a while back, and no multiple people affecting genjutsus.

    (Taiguronsamon: Nel ) -
    Tiglon summon: Nel

    Type: Summon/Supplementary
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: /
    Description:
    The user draws his own blood and either wipes it on his Tiglon tattoo or uses the summoning technique in order to summon Nel, a warrior Tiglon. Nel takes on the typical look of a tiger but with a small clean mane along with a thick, gold cuffling around her neck and a small one around her tail. Around her paws hers fur is very thick and take on the shape of angel-like wings, which allows her to fly but at speeds 1 ranks below it's summoner. When she is first summoned she's small enough to fit on an average sized man's shoulder, only about a foot tall. And like all the other Tiglons she's able to communicate with the summoner via telepathy. She is also noted to be the only Tiglon to be able to walk on it's hine legs to function.
    Abilities
    Nel's abilities are more of a "support" type, she is able to use Genjutsu up to A-rank. Along with that she is able to feel her summoners chakra flow in a "sensing" type of way and force chakra into him/her in order to free them from A-rank and below genjutsu.. Nel is known to move at speeds equal to a Sannin Ranked Taijutsu specialist.

    - Only taught by william24
    - only summoned once per battle and lasts 5 turns
    - Breaking summoner out of genjutsu counts as a Kai
    - Only knows when the users in genjutsu when in contact

    ~Declined~ Where's the link of the approved custom summoning contract?

    (Katon: Mini-en gōremu ) -
    Fire Release: Mini Flame Golems

    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    The user first kneads katon chakra within his gut followed by spewing out flames but using shape manipulation to instantly mold the flames into several (up to 6) golems of fire. Each golem will stand about 4 feet tall and have tiny tails. The golems can all spew out streams of fire that reach long range and equal to B-rank fire. At any moment the user can perform one hand seal thus detonating any chosen golem(s) and causing severe damage to anything in close range.

    - Only taught by william24
    - Can only be used 2x
    - Using the streams of fire count as an allotted jutsu per turn.
    - Detonating any amount of golems count as a jutsu per turn. I.e. If the user explodes 4/6 of the golems at once, that only takes up 1 jutsu.

    ~Declined~ don't resubmit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Alternative View Post
    (Futon: Soyokaze Suteppu) - Wind Release: Zephyr Step
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: -
    Description: This technique is in a similar respect to the Peacock Whirlwind Formation technique. The user constantly expels wind chakra from their body, creating a current of wind which revolves around them. The purpose of the technique is to give the user extra maneuverability so they can become more agile with their movements, allowing them to swiftly move around people, small projectiles and "pillar based" techniques like tornadoes. The wind revolving around the user is only strong enough to make the user more agile, and doesn't protect against projectiles. The technique only increases one's flexibility allowing them to move around these things, it doesn't allow for any speed increments. If used on a person, the velocity of the current can knock them off their feet.
    Notes:
    - Can only be used five times a match.
    ________________________
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    Doesn't protect against projectiles isn't enough, i said i don't allow 360 degree defenses, so you should've mentioned that it doesn't protect against anything, and remove that pillar based techniques, tornadoes will pull you towards them you won't be able to dodge them using the technique.
    (Futon: Soyokaze Suteppu) - Wind Release: Zephyr Step
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: -
    Description: This technique is in a similar respect to the Peacock Whirlwind Formation technique. The user constantly expels wind chakra from their body, creating a current of wind which revolves around them. The purpose of the technique is to give the user extra maneuverability so they can become more agile with their movements, allowing them to swiftly move around people and small projectiles. The wind revolving around the user is only strong enough to make the user more agile, and doesn't protect against anything. The technique only increases one's flexibility allowing them to move around these things, it doesn't allow for any speed increments. If used on a person, the velocity of the current can knock them off their feet.
    Notes:
    - Can only be used five times a match.


    ~Approved~

    Removed the pillar based techniques part.


    replacing CW found here

    Quote Originally Posted by Alternative View Post
    (Serēnogurōbu) - Sereno Gloves
    Rank: B
    Type: Weapon
    Range: -
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: -
    Description: Otherwise known as Unbreakable Fists, the Sereno Gloves are a special brand of gauntlet worn by the user. The backs of the gloves are lined with a chakra-reactive metal, mostly used to defend against blades and other weapons. The chakra reactive metal is used to reinforce the gloves to strengthen them, which is why they are considered unbreakable. The strengthening could be compared to the high-speed healing of a medical ninja, constantly reinforcing the gloves with chakra. Another feature is that the gloves hold is that they have special apparatuses which resemble boosters. The user can channel chakra into these boosters so that for a split second, they can amplify the speed of one's punches and other hand-based taijutsu techniques, increasing the rank of these techniques by one rank when used.

    __________________________
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    So you just disregarded what i said about being traceable by normal eyes? do this again and i'll DNR the technique, mention that the "strengthening" doesn't heal you in anyway and only reinforces the gloves.


    Removed the +15
    (Serēnogurōbu) - Sereno Gloves
    Rank: B
    Type: Weapon
    Range: -
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: -
    Description: Otherwise known as Unbreakable Fists, the Sereno Gloves are a special brand of gauntlet worn by the user. The backs of the gloves are lined with a chakra-reactive metal, mostly used to defend against blades and other weapons. The chakra reactive metal is used to reinforce the gloves to strengthen them, which is why they are considered unbreakable. The strengthening could be compared to the high-speed healing of a medical ninja, constantly reinforcing the gloves with chakra although this doesn't heal the user at all. Another feature is that the gloves hold is that they have special apparatuses which resemble boosters. The user can channel chakra into these boosters so that for a split second, they can amplify the speed of one's punches and other hand-based taijutsu techniques, increasing the rank of these techniques by one rank when used, although the speed of the user's punches while amplified is still traceable by normal eyes.
    Notes:
    - Techniques aided by this weapon are still traceable by normal eyes.

    ~Approved~ Edited a bit.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Armadillo
    Scroll Owner: Roju
    Other Users who have signed contract: None yet
    Summoning Boss if existing: None yet
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None as of yet
    Description and Background:
    Habitat and anatomy
    Armadillos are small to medium-sized mammals. The smallest species, the pink fairy armadillo, is roughly chipmunk-sized at 85 g (3.0 oz) and 11 cm (4.3 in) in total length. The largest species, the giant armadillo, can be the size of a small pig, weigh up to 60 kg (150 lb) and be over 150 cm (39 in) long. They are prolific diggers. Many species use their sharp claws to dig for food, such as grubs, and to dig dens. The nine-banded armadillo prefers to build burrows in moist soil near the creeks, streams, and arroyos around which it lives and feeds. The diets of different armadillo species vary, but consist mainly of insects, grubs, and other invertebrates. Some species, however, feed almost entirely on ants and termites.


    Paws of a hairy and a giant armadillo
    In common with other xenarthrans, armadillos in general, have low body temperatures (33–36°C) and basal metabolic rates (from 40–60% of that expected in placental mammals of their mass). This is particularly true of types that specialize in using termites as their primary food source.
    The armor is formed by plates of dermal bone covered in relatively small, overlapping epidermal scales called "scutes", composed of bone with a covering of horn. Most species have rigid shields over the shoulders and hips, with a number of bands separated by flexible skin covering the back and flanks. Additional armor covers the top of the head, the upper parts of the limbs, and the tail. The underside of the animal is never armored, and is simply covered with soft skin and fur.
    This armor-like skin appears to be the main defense of many armadillos, although most escape predators by fleeing (often into thorny patches, from which their armor protects them) or digging to safety. Only the South American three-banded armadillos (Tolypeutes) rely heavily on their armor for protection. When threatened by a predator, Tolypeutes species frequently roll up into a ball. Other armadillo species cannot roll up because they have too many plates. The North American nine-banded armadillo tends to jump straight in the air when surprised, and consequently often collides with the undercarriage or fenders of passing vehicles.
    Armadillos have short legs, but can move quite quickly, and have the ability to remain under water for as long as six minutes. Because of the density of its armor, an armadillo will sink in water unless it swallows air, inflating its stomach to twice normal size and raising its buoyancy above that of water, allowing it to swim across narrow streams and ditches.
    Armadillos have very poor eyesight, and use their keen sense of smell to hunt. They use their claws for digging and finding food, as well as for making their homes in burrows. They dig their burrows with their claws, making only a single corridor the width of the animal's body. They have five clawed toes on their hindfeet, and three to five toes with heavy digging claws on their forefeet. Armadillos have a large number of cheek teeth, which are not divided into premolars and molars, but usually have incisors or canines.


    Special notes:
    -Can be used to bypass Katon while in defense mode being thrown or kicked at an enemy.
    -will float in water but cannot swim across great lengths of water.
    -Digging of the armadillo can be enhanced by adding my chakra to it.
    -speed is as stated they are quick and with a good running start they can produce attacks like chouji but with less attack damage.
    tattoo of the contract will recieve the armadillo mark.
    Restrictions:must be taught by Roju
    [has been held by -vendetta- but I believe he dropped it as he has mink for a summon now and can only hold one summon at sannin I believe and no one else has been shown using it beside's him and or holding it. I have pm him to find out some info but he is inactive.]


    If you find out any info about the armadillo and it is taken then here is my other choice

    ~Declined~ It's not mentioned in the Approved Custom Summons thread so i think it's okay, but remove those "special notes" part, the abilities of the animals are determined when they are made into techniques.

    Summoning Animal: Alligator
    Scroll Owner: Roju
    Other Users who have signed contract: None yet
    Summoning Boss if existing: None yet
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None as of yet
    Description and Background:
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Crocodi...and_crocodiles

    mark of the alligator: Restriction's: must be taught by Roju.

    ~Declined~
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 02-01-2013 at 04:44 PM. Reason: Added jutsu

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Fuuton: Enbu Ketatamashii Fuuton) Wind Style: Waltz Of The Piercing Wind
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will do 2 handseals and Swing Both of their legs back to back Once. The Right Leg when swung will create a huge gust of wind that travels to the left. As quickly the left left when swung will travel to the right. Causing the two winds to meet in the middle causing something similar to a tornado. The tornado will travel towards the opponent in a vertical manner, with the tip of the tornado facing the opponent.
    :Note: Can only use Twice
    :Note: No A rank or above wind in the same turn

    ~Approved~ Edited a bit.

    1:17-1:21


    (Fuuton: Fuuton tate danpen) Wind Style: Wind Shield Shredder
    Type: Defense/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will a set of 5 handseals. Once done several streams of wind will then emerge from around you going in all directions. The winds are very sharp that it can slice through B Rank and Below Earth if come in contact. This jutsu is more so a defensive technique to give the user some time to plan for an attack but can be used offensively.

    :Note: Can use Twice
    :Note: Can Keep it active for Two turns
    :Note: Cant use no jutsu as long as this is active
    :Note: No Wind jutsu in the same turn as this

    ~Declined~ Similar Techniques exist.

    0:41-0:42 Is how it looks
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Fuuton: Kaosu Kyuutai) - Wind style: Mayhem Orb
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user focusses wind chakra into the air. The air around the user and opponent begins changing color to a black color, swirling around them rapidly. Remaining in his focus stance the air quickly encloses the area that the user and his opponent occupy, creating a dome of air denser than steel. Enclosing larger areas takes both more chakra and more time, making it dangerous to enclose any area larger than 100 feet. This may also be used to enclose only his targets within the dome, confining them to an area he controls. Due to the nature of this jutsu the entire area within the dome will instantly combust from a fire jutsu. Due to it's properties, any lightning that tries to go out of come inside the dome, will instantly be dispersed by the wind. The user, if wanted, may perform 2 handseals and cause the dome of dense air to enclose completly, crushing everyone within the dome.
    May only be taught by Lokí
    No A rank of higher wind the next turn.
    No other wind technique can be used in the same turn.
    Only useable x3 times per battle.
    ||Declined|| Do Not Resubmit

    Summoning Animal: Ferrets
    Scroll Owner: Lokí
    Other Users who have signed contract: n/a
    Summoning Boss if existing: Frabolts (below)
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Soon
    Description and Background: The ferret is a mammal. Ferrets are sexually dimorphic predators with males being substantially larger than females. They typically have brown, black, white, or mixed fur. Unlike their polecat ancestors, which are solitary animals, most ferrets will live happily in social groups. They are territorial, like to burrow, and prefer to sleep in an enclosed area. As with skunks, ferrets can release their anal gland secretions when startled or scared, but the smell is much less potent and dissipates rapidly.
    Ferret Tattoo symbol located on the summoner's right wrist.


    (Feretto Kuchiyose no jutsu: Kasai Kami Kaonbuto) - Ferret Summoning Technique: Earth Emperor Frabolts
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long (Summoned in Short range)
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The boss of the Ferret family/contract, he is respected by every other ferret and is well known for his seriousness and loyalty. Frabolts whom makes every other Ferret shiver yet feel very safe when around him, is roughly the size of gamakichi when on 4 legs, when standing in two legs, he is 2 times as tall, his with is enough to wrap around a human 1 entire circle. It is completly white around his entire body with red eyes. He is able to speak English and respects his summoner aswell as shows the most loyalty possible. He can run at a very high speed, easily out-running a regular ninja. He has a very high sense of smell, being able to smell up to mid ranges, when smelling an sense diferent from it's summoner, it'll instantly take the offensive and show off their canine teeth at the unkown target. It has sharp claws/nails easily able to rip human off flesh. It's able to use by its own the technique "Killing Intent" by glaring at the opponent with it's red eyes and growling his teeth showing off it's pure killing intention. The rank it has when using Killing intent is that of a Kage, however if someone of lower rank where to summon him, his killing intent rank would also drop to the rank of the summoner. This shows that it feels stronger with some summoners than others. It is able to affect both humans and other summonings with Killing intent, however it's only able to do this once. Aside from that, thanks to his earth affinity, he is able to easily travel through ground. A particular signature move of his is to hide underground and pop up with his jaws open under the target, biting and eating them alive if captured within his reach, Lokí has named this particular technique of his, "war dance" and Frabolts proudly accepted the name. Frabolts who feels the need to portect his summoner at all times is also able to focus earth chakra across his entire body and using the technique "Earth Release: Earth Spear Technique" he hardens his skin and fur to a steel-like quality, creating a B rank defense wich he uses to protect his summoner by either surrounding him or simply stand infront of them, he also uses it to defend himself when needed. He allows his summoner and sometimes, allies of his or his summoner to ride on his back in means for travel, he can carry at most 3 people on his back without his speed decreasing, if wanted, it may carry at most, 4 people, though his speed with decrease.

    May only be summoned 1 time per battle.
    May only remain on the field for 4 turns.
    Must have signed the Ferret contract to summon.
    All his techniques count towards the users 3 moves.

    ~Leaving for Scorps~

    ______________
    ±± Both Declined ±±
    This contract is virtually another variation of Marten, weasel, etc. Weasel is cannot and Martens are done. And I'm pretty sure this was tried before.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by demon fang View Post
    Summoning Animal: Moles (animal)
    Scroll Owner: Fang
    Other Users who have signed contract: none at the moment
    Summoning Boss if existing: none at the moment
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: none at the moment
    Description and Background: Moles are small cylindrical mammals adapted to subterranean life. They have velvet fur, tiny/invisible ears and eyes, and atrophied hindlimbs as well as short, powerful forelimbs with large paws oriented for digging. Moles have been found to tolerate higher levels of carbon dioxide than other mammals, because of their blood cells having special and unique hemoglobin protein. Moles are also able to reuse the oxygen inhaled when above ground and from this they are able to survive in low-oxygen environments such as underground burrows. A mole primarily eats earthworms and other small invertebrates found in the soil, and a variety of nuts. Moles have polydactyl forepaws. Eaching have an extra thumb next to the regular thumb. The extra thumb is also called a prepollex. Moles possess saliva that is toxic which paralyzes their prey. That is why they can store their prey that is still-alive for later consumption. They also have an affinity for earth release.


    Restriction: Must be taught by Fang.
    __________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Remove the toxic saliva that can paralyze the opponent, and the affinity for earth release.

    ============================

    (Raiton: Gouzen Tsuchi) - Lightning Release: Roaring Earth
    Type: Short
    Rank: D
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 10
    Damage: 20
    Description: The user concentrates their lightning chakra all throughout their body. Once the target is within close range, the user places their fists on the targets chest releasing electricity in a horizontal column outward. The user finishes by slamming their hands on the ground and releasing electricity along the ground and shot upward in a vertical column below the targets feet.

    Restriction:
    - Physical contact needs to be made.
    - Counts as two moves.
    - Can only be taught by fang.
    ________________________
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    A bit too much for a D-rank, it's like two moves cramped in one.
    Resubmitting

    Summoning Animal: Moles (animal)
    Scroll Owner: Fang
    Other Users who have signed contract: none at the moment
    Summoning Boss if existing: none at the moment
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: none at the moment
    Description and Background: Moles are small cylindrical mammals adapted to subterranean life. They have velvet fur, tiny/invisible ears and eyes, and atrophied hindlimbs as well as short, powerful forelimbs with large paws oriented for digging. Moles have been found to tolerate higher levels of carbon dioxide than other mammals, because of their blood cells having special and unique hemoglobin protein. Moles are also able to reuse the oxygen inhaled when above ground and from this they are able to survive in low-oxygen environments such as underground burrows. A mole primarily eats earthworms and other small invertebrates found in the soil, and a variety of nuts. Moles have polydactyl forepaws. Eaching have an extra thumb next to the regular thumb. The extra thumb is also called a prepollex.


    Restriction: Must be taught by Fang.

    ~Approved~

    The toxic saliva and earth affinity have been removed.
    =====================================
    (Raiton: Gouzen Tsuchi) - Lightning Release: Roaring Earth
    Type: offensive
    Rank: D
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 10
    Damage: 20
    Description: The user concentrates their lightning chakra all throughout their body. Once the target is within close range, the user slams their hands on the ground, releasing electricity along the ground and is shot upward below the targets feet in the form of a vertical column made of electricity.

    Restriction:
    - Physical contact with the ground must be made as soon as the target is within range.
    - Can only be taught by fang.

    ~Approved~

    Removed the restriction for two move count. Stuck with the vertical column attack for this one.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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    Summoning Animal:Deer
    Scroll Owner:Asuna
    Other Users who have signed contract:
    Summoning Boss if existing:
    Xerneas The Chital Sage
    [B]Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A(will be made later if approved)

    Deer (singular and plural) are the ruminant
    mammals forming the family Cervidae.
    Species in the Cervidae family include white-
    tailed deer, mule deer such as black-tailed
    deer, elk, moose, red deer, reindeer
    (caribou), fallow deer, roe deer and chital.
    Male deer of all species (except the Chinese
    water deer) and also female reindeer grow
    and shed new antlers each year. In this they
    differ from permanently horned animals such
    as antelope; these are in the same order as
    deer and may bear a superficial
    resemblance. The musk deer of Asia and
    water chevrotain (or mouse deer) of tropical
    African and Asian forests are not usually
    regarded as true deer and form their own
    families, Moschidae and Tragulidae,
    respectively.

    Custom History:The Deer summons are a species of proud animals residing in the Land of Snow in the darkest and coldest parts of the forests.There leader is the Xerneas of the Chital species.Each species are under his command and separates them based on there species creating clans within the contract having the Chital species as the highest ranking clan.Though they are different they all respect each others species and will always ban together as one common animal and help in times of trouble.
    Abilities
    All Deer have the ability to talk normally or telepathically to each other and there summoner(only contract holder can talk telepathically to Deer),they all can detach there current antlers and regrow them nearly instantly when needed to similar to the Kaguya Clan and there bones.Only the entire Chital clan(Chittal species) can stand on two legs with the exception of the other Deer Council members.

    Summoning Tattoo:
    [IMG]bestclipartblog.com/clipart-pics/deer-clip-art-1.png[/img]

    _______________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    remove that telepathic ability, and the growing antlers thing, dunno why you need them anyway, and how would a deer stand on 2 legs?


    (Shōkan jaiantodia: Akushisujikakuran: Xerneas
    akushisujikasēji)Giant Deer Summoning:Chital Clan:Xerneas the Chital Sage

    Type:Summoning
    Rank:S-Rank
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:40
    Damage:
    Description:Xerneas is the Leader of the Chital Clan of the Deer contract and the head of the Deer Contract,he is a brave and wise leader having the rule of many clans under him.Xerneas is a huge deer being half the size of Gamabunta but much like the other members of the Deer Council he is able to also stand on two legs and walk and run fast at speed that make him a formal opponent in Taijutsu,when he is on two legs he is almost the exact height of Gamabunta standing at 90 metre high,but his antlers make up the extra 10 metres making him the exact height as him with his antlers.Xerneas has blue and black fur and a short tail,with unusual rainbow colored antlers which only appears in the current Deer contract boss.Xerneas never took interest in learning to use elements and instead preferred using Taijutsu and Genjutsu in his fighting styles,being able to use Taijutsi up to A-rank and Genjutsu up to C-Rank however due to him not being able to perform hand seals he uses a special grunt that only the Deers use as a trigger to activate the Genjutsus.Xerneas also carries a bow across his back that he uses with his antlers that he can remove part of them to create his own arrows and cover Mid to Long range distances on his targets,as all there deers have the ability to rapidly grow back there antlers.He is big enough to carry 4 people on his back when on all fours and runs at speeds that a normal shinobi can't keep up with but is abit slower when standing on 2 legs.

    -Can only be used once per battle
    -Remains in battle for 3 turns
    -Can only perform two Genjutsu techniques per battle and will disperses after second usage
    -All jutsus done by him counts to user's 3 jutsu limitation.
    -Must have sign the Deer contract to sign
    -Shooting an arrow counts as a move
    ____________________________
    ✘ Declined ✘
    Resubmit when the contract is approved, right now i won't check it.
    Summoning Animal:Deer
    Scroll Owner:Asuna
    Other Users who have signed contract:
    Summoning Boss if existing:
    Xerneas The Chital Sage
    [B]Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A(will be made later if approved)

    Deer (singular and plural) are the ruminant
    mammals forming the family Cervidae.
    Species in the Cervidae family include white-
    tailed deer, mule deer such as black-tailed
    deer, elk, moose, red deer, reindeer
    (caribou), fallow deer, roe deer and chital.
    Male deer of all species (except the Chinese
    water deer) and also female reindeer grow
    and shed new antlers each year. In this they
    differ from permanently horned animals such
    as antelope; these are in the same order as
    deer and may bear a superficial
    resemblance. The musk deer of Asia and
    water chevrotain (or mouse deer) of tropical
    African and Asian forests are not usually
    regarded as true deer and form their own
    families, Moschidae and Tragulidae,
    respectively.

    Custom History:The Deer summons are a species of proud animals residing in the Land of Snow in the darkest and coldest parts of the forests.There leader is the Xerneas of the Chital species.Each species are under his command and separates them based on there species creating clans within the contract having the Chital species as the highest ranking clan.Though they are different they all respect each others species and will always ban together as one common animal and help in times of trouble.

    Summoning Tattoo:
    [IMG]bestclipartblog.com/clipart-pics/deer-clip-art-1.png[/img]


    ~Approved~

    Removed the abilities like I was tolded to do
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 02-01-2013 at 04:55 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Magen: Miyagi no Sukāretto Bonsai)- Demonic Illusion: Miyagi's Scarlet Bonsai
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user will perform three hand seals (Dragon → Boar → Rat), and then channel their chakra into their opponent’s nervous system, taking control of their senses. Immediately after, the opponent will feel an uncomfortable piercing and twisting pain throughout their entire body, as if they are being pinched by something incredibly sharp. Soon after, their flesh suddenly erupts from underneath their skin, causing massive hemorrhaging and blood to run down their body. The muscles and skin of the limbs rise up into the air, twisting and forming into several species of flowers, vines and small leaves. The organs of the abdominal cavity spill out, and curl into long, thick roots. These roots slither down the body and attach to the ground. On the forehead of the enemy, the skin bursts open sending a torrent of blood down the face, clogging the airways of the opponent, suffocating them. The flesh rises up and forms into a gnarled, old bonsai tree. The growing garden of flesh continues its formation until the body of the opponent is virtually unrecognizable, replaced by the image of a small, lush garden of human entrails, flesh, and muscle. Due to the initial growing of the flesh garden, the massive pain “experienced” by the opponent completely restricts their movement and causes severe mental stress.
    Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile
    Note: Usable twice per battle
    Note: No genjutsu above A-rank the same or next turn

    ||Approved||
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Summoning Animal: Mockingbird
    Scroll Owner: The Girl on Fire
    Other Users who have signed contract: None
    Summoning Boss if existing: Mellark
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Odair, Hawthorn, Snow.
    Description and Background: Mockingbirds are a group of New World passerine birds from the Mimidae family. They are best known for the habit of some species mimicking other species, therefore every summon that's a part of the mockingbird contract is capable of using the Transformation Technique, to change their shape. most commonly birds and the sounds of insects and amphibians, often loudly and in rapid succession. There are 17 species in three genera and the species live in a wide range of habitats.

    -Signers must wear this tattoo.-

    ~Approved~

    (Kchuysei: Mellark) Summoning: Mellark:
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user pulls out a small scroll places his/ her hand on it. With this action the user summons Mellark the king Mockingbird. Mellark is big enough for the user to stand on comfortably whilst flying (Half the size of Gamabunta). Mellark is also able to use Wind up to A-rank (S if jutsu was used by opponent previously) and Earth Jutsu up to B-rank (A if jutsu was used by opponent previously) that do not require handseals.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle-
    -Remains on the field for four turns-
    -Must have signed the Mockingbird contract to summon-

    ~Declined~ Only one elemental affinity is permitted per summon, plus i don't get what you mean by the colored parts.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 02-19-2013 at 10:37 AM. Reason: Adding a passive ability as requested by the holder

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by mangekyo byakugan View Post
    Hyouton: Kagirinai(Ice Release: Unlimited)
    Type: Attack/Defense*
    Rank: Forbidden*
    Range: Short-Mid Range*
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: *The user first performs a sequence of five hand seals and creates six ice weapons(any kind of weapon sword, spear, axe...)two of the weapons will be in the users hands the other four will be on his sides (from, back, left, and right)After the weapons are created the user will hold out the two weapons in his hands and spin inside the perimeter of the weapons, while the user spins he release his chakra *from the weapons and manipulate it so it forms a ice wall that is above the four weapons this causes the weapons in his hand to disappear and "go" to the wall and the weapons on the ground will have their "tip" inside the wall the user will then use further shale and chakra manipulation to increase the length of the weapons so they are "spikes" on top of the wall the user then performs five hand seals and causes the same process to occur but this time the weapons will cover the entire wall. The user can make a maximum of 6 walls with a minimum of 3 walls. Now after tue desired number of walls are created the user will perform two hand seals and direct then"cyclone" of weapons toward his opponent(s) the "cyclone" has a radius of 3 meters and it can be decreased to a smaller radius through the user will, the "cyclone" has the weapons on it's "tip" and the walls(inside and out) are fill of jagged pillars of ice that are emerging from every direction of walls. The user can attack using this technique by either directing the "tip" of the cyclone to the opponent(s) or by trapping the opponent(s) inside the "cyclone" and let it close in on them.
    -Usable once
    -must have mastered ice
    -must be member of yuki clan.
    -no forbidden ranked techniques for the rest of the battle.
    -can't be performed by shadow clones or when shadow clones are created.
    -for the next three turns the user is restricted to D rank water and wind and no ice.


    Hyouton: *Zairu (Ice Release: Spiked Laso)*
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Short-Mid Range*
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will first perform two hand seals and send his chakra to his index finger after that is done he will swing his finger in the air above him and follow it up by directing his finger towards his opponent as the user directs his finger towards his opponent he releases the Hyouton chakra built up in his finger in the form of a transparent (similar to the transparency of ice disk tech) rope that has a "whole" in it in the front after the opponent is caught inside the rope the user will "click" one finger to his index finger and cause the rope to tighten around the opponent since chakra is built up in the second finger and through the clickage the user sends his chakra down the rope the user will then click his other finger and cause the rope to harden and cause ice spikes to "emerge" from the area that surrounds the opponent and impale them.
    -Must be from Yuki Clan.
    -Must have mastered Ice release.
    -Usable three times per battle.
    -No s rank ice and above on the same turn.

    X-Both Declined-X Very vague descriptions, not that i mind. I'd check 10 times if i need to understand properly, but text based RP needs proper explanation of moves. It would be a hindrance during battles.

    Hyouton: Handanryoku (Ice Release: Pillars of Judgment)*
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Mid range*
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: *The user first performs three hand seals and causes 4 pillars of ice to emerge from The ground or be created around the opponent(s). The pillars are arranged so that they form a parallelogram with point A(left of opponent) 6 meters away from point B(right of opponent) and point A 4 meters away from point C(back left of opponent) and point D like point C but from B, the user then performs another hand seal and causes ice to emerge from the pillars and connect to the other points so a parm is made(Ice does not cover the ground nut it covers the "roof" and there are no diagonals) the ice that emerges from the pillars are from inside reflective like a mirror and from the outside are similar to this found in investigation rooms so the user can see his opponent while they are inside but the opponent can only see his reflection, this technique serve as a capturing technique. More techniques related to it will be added like "Sin", "Slice" etc*
    -Usable four times per battle.
    -Lasts until destroyed or escaped from.
    -No S rank ice on same and next turn.

    X-Approved-X Additional techniques may or may not be approved, that's given.

    Note when I say more techs related will be added I mean in a another submission if this gets approved*
    For above technique
    Ice Release Pillars of Judgment: Frozen Hell(Hyouton Handanryoku: Touketsu Heru)*
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S rank
    Range: Mid Range
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: *After the opponent(s) is(are) trapped in Ice Release Pillars of Judgment Technique the user will perform a sequence of five hand seals and cause water to materialize inside the pillars of judgment, the water is materialized from the moisture in the air inside the technique, once the water is materialized and has covered the entire space of the technique(this takes about 10 seconds) the user will perform another five hand seals and freeze the water in the structure thus freezing the opponent(s) inside it.
    -Usable Twice.
    -No S rank ice on same and next turn.
    -Can only be done after IRPoJT is used.
    -The user can choose to freeze the water even if it hasn't filled the structure.
    -The user can't perform another technique while 'releasing' the water as he/she must concentrate on that action.
    -Must have mastered Ice Release.
    -If somehow someone else(partner) created water inside the structure in a specific way, the user can freeze it as well as long as it is B ranked and below.

    Other

    Ice Release: Speed Freak(Chisoku Henshu*
    Type: Attack
    Rank: F ranked*
    Range: Long Range
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90(40 to user after one turn)
    Description: *The user first performs 12 hand seala, and creates 20 ice mirrors similar to the Canon technique... The user will arrange the mirrors in the form of a circle, the mirrors will be connected by a line, the line is just for show and has no relevance for the technique. Now for the main purpose of the technique begins now, the user will have to travel in the 20 mirrors in either a clockwise or counter-clockwise direction, this mist be done for 1 turn, after 1 turn has passes the user will create an extra mirror on the field( mostly in the sky) and the user will emerge from that mirror with immensely great speeds(the S rank canon ones give the user great speed, and now even more chakra is used) the user will appear as a blur to people even those of same caliber(rank), now while the user is descending(or emerging) from the mirror, he/she has two choices, the first is to either deliver a 'normal' Taijutsu attack(punch/kick/etc) to the opponent, the punch will take a toll on both parties, the other choice is performing one hand seal and releasing a wave of ice from the palm, the wave will freeze the opponent instantly when it comes into contact with them, but at the cost of that palm being frozen as well.(The wave is not really a wave but a shroud that is 'attached' to the users palm)
    -Usable once.
    -Must have mastered Ice
    -The user wont be able to use Ice for three turns(Wind and Water for two turns)
    -The users palm will be frozen.
    -The user can choose not to attack, and use the speed in order to flee for example.
    -The user can attack with a Rasengan for example, but only on the same turn. Meaning the user can use S ranks on same turn but not the next, the reason is that the users state of mind will be in kill mode and he will try harder thus being able to use more chakra.
    No S ranks on next turn.

    Picture of it


    ~Both Declined~ OP, don't resubmit.

    Majestic Shoes*
    Type: Supplementary/Weapon
    Rank: S rank*
    Range: Self
    Chakra: 40(-5 per turn)
    Damage: N/A
    Description: *Majestic Shoes are a pair of custom made shoes, the shoes have three abilities, A passive one which is the sensory ability of the shoes, the shoes can sense anything that is one meter below it, it does so by using the users chakra as a comparison method, it will send a 'wave' that will feel chakra and if there was a different chakra than that of the user 1 meter or less below, the shoes will provide a stimulus to the users feet, the stimulus will be recognized by the user as a message "Foreign Chakra located" the disadvantage is that it doesn't distinguish between people, raw chakra, or even animal so it sometimes is a waste and a hindrance to the user. The second ability is the thrust or burst the shies can 'perform' the user will first stand on a water source for one whole turn while he/she is doing so the user will be absorbing water particles and 'sending' them to his shoes. After the turn the user will have gathered enough water in the shoes, which makes it slightly heavier. The user can then choose to 'release' the water from his shoes this will propel the user into the air(mid range in the air) this ability can be used three times, after the three times water must be absorbed once Again in order to use the thrust again. The thrust can be used as an offensive technique that can cause damage equivalent to B rank offensive water technique. The third ability is the offensive one, the user can create spikes from his feet that will emerge from the shoes and hit the opponent, the spikes can be launched up to mid range. The spikes are made up of ice chakra and are B ranked.
    The reason why the shoes can do what it does is that it is made of material that allows 'objects' that are from inside to exit freely, while not damaging the shoes itself. The sensory ability is accomplished by the special material of the shoes. And the thrust's water will be stored in the fiber of the shoes.
    -Must be Kage rank.
    -Must be Yuki Clan member.
    -Must have mastered Ice release.

    -The shoes are somewhat symbiotic(in order to create stimulus)
    -The thrust and spikes can be released from every angle of the shoes.
    -The shoes are not indestructible or anything they take damage like normal shoes, the exception are the spikes and thrust ability.

    ~Declined~ No sensing weapons are allowed anymore, and seriously remove those useless restrictions that i colored, and let me get this straight, you want the abilities not to count towards your move count? if so then no, i won't approved it like that, and how is the user is going to "absorb" water molecules and "send" them to the shoes again? this means that the shoes itself absorb water?
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 02-01-2013 at 05:05 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by -Broly- View Post
    Gurēsushēbingu: Shaving Grace
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/a (various amounts depending on where hit)
    Description: The Shaving Grace is a pair of gauntlets that are connected by 2 black armbands to the user's arm on the palm side and sharp golden spikes made out of a strong resistant chakra metal going down the other. The spikes go from the start of the users forearm and continues down to each individual finger, so as not to disrupt handseals. The spikes are connected to a flexible material with the parts that go down the fingers also having small bands on the palm side so that they move with the users fingers. The Shaving Grace works by utilizing the high vibration used to make lightning chakra and channeling it into the gauntlets. This makes the gauntlets vibrate at a high rate, making the spikes on them function similar to a chainsaw when used, much like samehada, who shaves instead of cuts. Due to this the user is able to painfully tear and rip the flesh from an opponent upon contact and even shred normal metal objects due to the the immense shredding power given. Since a large amount of lightning is channeled into the gauntlets to achieve this, the user can also slice through B rank earth and wood. When activated the gauntlets make a sound similar to a chainsaw and due to the vibration the users handseals are slowed if they are activated while doing handseals.

    -Activation only lasts in quick bursts up to 15 seconds long
    -Can only be used by Broly and those he allows
    -Shaving effects can only be used 3 times before needing a 2 turn cooldown
    -In order to maintain control of the strong vibrations the user must have mastered basic taijutsu
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    You say that the gauntlets are made of a strong chakra resistant metal, then how are you going to channel lightning chakra into it? remove that 15 seconds activation it messes things up in the RP, give it a turn limit instead, give the cutting through B-rank earth and Wood ability a rank, and a usage limit.


    Fuuton:Zetsubō no kaze:Wind Release: Breeze Of Desperation
    Type: Attack/Sup
    Rank: B
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Cost: 40 (+15 in conjuction with fire techs)
    Description: This jutsu is best used in conjuction with a fire jutsu. The user make the tiger handseal. As the tiger handseal is made wind will form around the fire jutsu similar to Wave of inspiration and water techs. Only difference is as the wind circulates around the fire, It will combine with the fire seconds after making the fire more powerful. If not used with a fire tech. Its just a circular wind breeze. Enough to call minor scratches but not major damage.

    -Can only be used 4 times per battle
    -Can only be taught by -Broly-
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    How is the wind made? you influence the air around the fire? or you blow the circular wind? and regardless, how is it released when not being used in conjunction with a fire techinque?

    Gurēsushēbingu: Shaving Grace
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/a (various amounts depending on where hit)
    Description: The Shaving Grace is a pair of gauntlets that are connected by 2 black armbands to the user's arm on the palm side and sharp golden spikes made out of a strong and resistant chakra metal going down the other. The spikes go from the start of the users forearm and continues down to each individual finger, so as not to disrupt handseals. The spikes are connected to a flexible material with the parts that go down the fingers also having small bands on the palm side so that they move with the users fingers. The Shaving Grace works by utilizing the high vibration used to make lightning chakra and channeling it into the gauntlets. This makes the gauntlets vibrate at a high rate, making the spikes on them function similar to a chainsaw when used, much like samehada, who shaves instead of cuts. Due to this the user is able to painfully tear and rip the flesh from an opponent upon contact and even shred normal metal objects due to the the immense shredding power given. Since a large amount of lightning is channeled into the gauntlets to achieve this, the gauntlets each have the cutting power of A rank lightning When activated the gauntlets make a sound similar to a chainsaw and due to the vibration the users handseals are slowed if they are activated while doing handseals.

    -Can activate only 2 times per turn.
    -Can only be used twice per turn for Taijutsu purposes (directly against an opponent and not a jutsu)
    -Can only cut through a jutsu once per turn

    -Can only be used by Broly and those he allows
    -Shaving effects can only be used 3 times before needing a 2 turn cooldown
    -In order to maintain control of the strong vibrations the user must have mastered basic taijutsu

    Added everything you wanted and cleared up the chakra metal issue

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    Remove the useless restriction of mastery over taijutsu. Its just a filler. Second, you don't seem to understand how a chainsaw works. I suggest you look it up. Has nothing to do with vibrations but movement. Second, if you have spikes in your palm, regardless of how you want it to seem, you can't do hanseals. Not all at least. The restrictions I bolded either don't make sense as a whole (some contradict eachother) or are simply are badly written and explained. What happens if you do a palm strike with no chakra on an enemy? Or a punch? Comparisson with samhada? It doesn't make sense because, again, the chainsaw reference throws the rest out of the window in terms of logic. Still a long way to go until its approvable.

    Fuuton:Zetsubō no kaze:Wind Release: Breeze Of Desperation
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40 (+15 in conjuction with fire techs)
    Description: This jutsu is best used in conjuction with a fire jutsu. The user make the tiger handseal. As the tiger handseal is made wind will form directly around the fire jutsu similar to Wave of inspiration and water techs. The only difference is as the wind circulates around the fire, the fire will become stronger due to the wind empowering it. If not used with a fire tech the wind will be released from the mouth as a circular wind breeze. Enough to call minor scratches but not major damage.

    -Can only be used 4 times per battle
    -Can only be taught by -Broly-

    Did what you said, clarified the technique

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    Yet what you added makes no sense. If you want wind to form around the fire, you need to explain how it happens and limit it. What if its a fire technique that happens around your opponent? Its clear what you want from the technique but your description doesn't come even close to explaining in a suficienet manner how you achieve it.



    Doton: Daiyamondodarasupēji no daiyamondokattā no datto wa da teidan no atarimae o okonaimasu Earth Style: Diamond dallas page's diamond cutter dat does da ding dude duh
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: What can be seen as turning Moving Earth Core into an offensive technique, the user stomps their foot on the ground and makes the ground move down, up to 8m at high speeds, enough to make the opponent lose balance like "Moving Earth Core". Then as the opponent goes downward the user claps his hands and makes the walls around the hole close in at the same high speeds, crushing the opponent. The hole can be up to 8x8x8 meters in terms of size.

    -Can only be used twice per battle
    -No S rank and above earth for the turn after this jutsu is used
    -Can only be taught by Broly

    ~Leaving for Scorps~

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    Similar to existing techniques. DNR. And name your technique decently please.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Akagami Shanks.. View Post
    Resubmitting

    (Hyouton: Kyodaina kōri no koi no sakana) Ice Release: Giant Ice Koy Fish
    Type: Attack / Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80 ( 20 to self )
    Description:
    The user will Release a Very Large amount of Chakra into the air after releasing the chakra they will Use Shape Manipulation And Nature Transformation to turn the chakra into a giant Koy Fish made of Ice the Koy Fish is about 10 times the size of the user. When the Koy Fish is created it can be released in any direction the user choosen but it can not be redirected after its released it attacks the user with great speed or acts as a defense againist anything its capable of blocking

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Can not use any A rank or Above Ice Release Technqiues after using this Technique for 2 turns
    Note: Can only be taught by Kenshin…
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    So this can be made anywhere in the air? no, that needs to be defined, whether it is above your opponent or another location, if it's made above the opponent then there should be a gap of like 10 meters between the technique and the opponent, also remove "giant" out of the technique, it's 10 times as big as you, it's not THAT big lol.


    Removed the ridiculous restrictions and removed the part about genjutsu and Taijutsu also changed the Rank and placed it as a S Rank
    Hyouton: Kyodaina kōri no koi no sakana) Ice Release: Giant Ice Koy Fish [/B]
    Type: Attack / Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80 ( 20 to self )
    Description:
    The user will Release a Very Large amount of Chakra into the air after releasing the chakra they will Use Shape Manipulation And Nature Transformation to turn the chakra into a Koy Fish made of Ice the Koy Fish is about 10 times the size of the user. When the Koy Fish is created it can be released in any direction the user choosen but it can not be redirected after its released it attacks the user with great speed or acts as a defense againist anything its capable of blocking The Koy Fish is made 10 meter infront of the opponent

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Can not use any A rank or Above Ice Release Technqiues after using this Technique for 2 turns
    Note: Can only be taught by Kenshin…

    ~Declined~ see the bold, trying to get yourself killed? lol, how would it be made 10 meters in front of the opponent if you are 5 meters in front of him? just mention that it comes out of the ground or from your body, because this reference isn't good enough.
     
         
    Last edited by Ryūjin; 02-01-2013 at 05:18 PM.

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    Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

    (Katon: Mikonenkou) - Fire Release: Flames of the Untamed
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: This technique is used to counter an opponent’s fire technique, however, to be effectively performed and damage the opponent, it should be used on continuous techniques, that take some time (like a stream of fire for example).
    The user will perform three hand seals and point his palms outwards, releasing his own fire chakra on the opponent’s fire technique. This will create a perturbation on the technique, causing it to suddenly explode in a big fire ball.
    This can be used to cancel an opponent’s fire technique and to possibly, catch him off guard, while he is performing it so it explodes near him. The bigger the opponent’s technique, the bigger the explosion
    - Usable three times per battle

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    ±± Declined ±±
    You can only do this up to one rank lower to this technique. If you use it against same rank, the result is a cancelthe mutual cancel of both techniques. However, what worries me is that you don't protect yourself. Just because you stick your palm against the enemy technique doesn't mean you can nulify all of its effects. The stream would engulf you by the time you can produce the disturbance to make it backfire onto the opponent.

    (Katon: Fire Release: Miyabitahane Fenikkusu, Sekensoroi Kashou) - Graceful Feathers of the Phoenix, World Set Ablaze
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (+10 per turn it’s active)
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will perform a row of 13 hand seals, creating an opening in the sky, similar to the one of Earth Release: Sticky Earth Drop, but up to long range, all around him. From there, multiple orange glowing chakra feathers will slowly start to fall down on the battlefield. However, these are no ordinary chakra feathers. Each of these feathers has a great amount of fire chakra within them, ready to be released. Once the user decides, with a single hand seal, he can make any number of feathers on a certain area to explode. The power of each feather is equal to five exploding tags. These feathers keep falling for three turns and only on the third will the first ones arrive on the ground (meaning it will take them three turns to arrive to the ground and the last ones will only arrive on the fifth turn after this jutsu is used). Although they keep falling, they can be neutralized by pouring water over them (though rain is not enough) or by blowing them away.
    - Usable twice per battle
    - Gap of 2 turns between usage

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    ±± Declined ±±
    I don't get it that muhc, 3 turns to get to the ground? Why?And, if each feather is 5 explosion tags...who many feathers can you make and how many can you explode at once? The result is a bit over the top in terms of desctrutive power.

    (Fuuinjutsu: Douzen Raiton) - Sealing Technique: Natural Lightning Release
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: -
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: -
    Description: For this technique to work, the user needs a scroll with pre-sealed lightning. However, this is no vulgar lightning, but rather, Natural Lightning, like the one produced by thunderclouds. Once he releases the seal – by performing a row of five hand seals - The user can perform lightning techniques, but from the scroll instead. For this, the user performs two hand seals to draw the natural lightning out of the scroll, followed by the jutsu’s needed hand seals in order to manipulate and shape the lightning. Since his techniques are now composed by Natural Lightning, they are much faster and stronger.
    - Lightning techniques used from this scroll now lose their weakness to wind, making them neutral to each other ( X-rank Wind = X-rank Natural Lightning)
    - Lightning techniques used from this scroll now overpower regular lightning techniques (X-rank Natural Lightning > X-rank Lightning)
    -The user does not need to make physical contact with the scroll, meaning he can throw it into the air, perform the hand seals and draw the technique out of it.
    - User can perform up to seven lightning techniques from this scroll
    - User can only possess two of these scrolls with him
    - Kirin cannot be performed from these scrolls

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    Idea is good but like normal water is weaker than chakra infused, ninjutsu water, so would lightning. The principle is that for kirin it was deadly not because of the fact that it was natural lightning but becuase it was a large neough amount of it. I get you can add X damage to lightning techniques used from the scroll, but you cannot negate elemenatal weaknesses and strenghts whitout adding a new chakra nature. Als, 7 techniques from one scroll is a bit too muhc. perhaps 4 is more suited. Make it add +20 to the techniques used from the scroll.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-08-2013 at 02:31 PM.

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