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    Custom Fighting Styles Submission



    ~Custom Fighting Styles~

    Every now and then it comes a time when you feel like creating your own special doctrine of combat, your own special fighting style. They are aditional fighting styles that may be Taijutsu Styles, Kenjutsu Styles or any other weapon styles. They can be vary variable and basically include any type of additional fighting style that fits either within the Hand to Hand Combat or the Weapons Combat.



    ~How to Submit a Custom Fighting Style~

    Many members seem to have difficulty with creating an understandable, approvable, and original custom fighting style, so here is a short but in depth analysis on what your fighting style should consist of.

    Step One: Choose a name with a Japanese translation

    Use this Online Translator to help you. Be sure to name the style correctly. Don't use Japanese in Kanji form; use standard Romanji instead.

    Step Two: Choose the type of your custom style:

    This section, while many people blow past it, needs to be accurate because if you want to include a certain ability in your custom fighting style, the type of your style needs to be consistent with whatever that ability may be. For example, if you create a GenTaijutsu style, then your CFS cannot include elemental manipulation unless you include Ninjutsu in the type of style. Stay consistent.

    Step Three: Background

    This is where you create a short background of your fighting style. Not only do you need to explain the reason that the style was created, but you also need to include anything essential to showing that this style is possible. Do not write a short story here, however. Explain the essentials: who created the style and how, when, and why did they create it. This isn't your biography’s history; we don’t need to hear every detail of the epic battle in which the style was made.

    Step Four: Description and Inner Workings of the Style

    Obviously, this is the most important and focused part of any good submission. First, allow me to say this, if you do not mention an ability in this section then it does not exist in your style. Second, if you mention an ability in your background but don’t mention it in here, your style will be declined for inconsistencies between the description and history. Speaking of history, this is not where you include additional history of your style. There’s a section for history, and a section for abilities; this is the latter. Everything about how your style works and the abilities included in it should be included right here.

    Step Five: Example Techniques

    Most of you know by now that this is now a mandatory part of submissions. How many techniques you give as an example is up to you, but a minimum of one is necessary and the checker of your submission reserves the right to ask you to make more examples if he or she does not find your current example(s) adequate.

    Step Six: Additional Effects and Restrictions

    What you put here is all relative to what is included in the custom fighting style. Meaning that the additional effects that you have need to make sense with the fighting style. If you were submitting a style involving slow and powerful strikes, it hardly makes sense for one of your additional effects to involve increased speed. In addition this is also not where you jam pack a bunch of speed or strength boosting abilities to make your character more powerful. As a general rule, two passive effects are a good amount. That said, you cannot make these effects too great. A custom fighting style is not the place to give your character Lee’s speed or the Raikage’s strength. Finally, if you want to have extensive additional effects, then you’d better have extensive additional restrictions as well.

    Step Seven: Wait for Approval

    Key word: wait. Unless you have a clear question in which you simply did not understand something that you checker said or you are explicitly asked to contact a moderator, do not message a moderator about an unapproved, unchecked, or pending technique. You are not allowed to message a moderator requesting them to discuss with you how to get your custom approved.

    *Things that do not qualify a Custom Fighting Style*

    Below are some very common submissions that we have seen that we have constantly told people do not qualify as Custom Fighting Styles. Read this section closely, because if your fighting style violates any of the three categories, you will be referenced back to one of these rules:

    • Anything that can be done free-form is not a Custom Fighting Style. In other words, most real life styles of fighting are already encompassed by normal taijutsu. Aikido, Jiu-Jitsu, boxing; these can all be done with normal taijutsu because they only involve certain movements.
    • Contrary to popular belief, simply focusing elemental or basic chakra into a weapon does not qualify as a CFS. This can already be done by normal ninja both in the manga/anime and using simple custom techniques, so a CFS is unnecessary here.
    • Modes are not CFSes. A Custom Fighting Style is meant to change how you fight, not allow you to enter a mode or state that temporarily increases your taijutsu/ninjutsu prowess or allows you to temporarily move at blinding speeds. There’s a clear difference in something that changes your fighting style and something that enhances your fighting style. A CFS is meant primarily to do the first of the two.



    ~Template for Custom Styles~


    PHP Code:
    [B][/B]
    [
    B]Type:[/B]
    [
    B]Background:[/B]
    [
    B]Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:[/B]
    [
    B]Example Techniques:[/B]
    [
    B]Additional effects and Restrictions:[/B




    ~Formatting Restrictions~


    -No submission that uses font or formatting alterations such as underline, bold, allignement, color, size, spoilers, etc will be checked. The only exception is that you are allowed to Bold or underline the title of your style when you submitt and you can use spoilers for videos or images you need to post for references.

    -An exception to the above rule is the requirement to bold the alterations on re-submissions. Its required that every altered or add part is bolded. If you simply take out something, write beneath the jutsu stating "I took out the part where...".

    -When submitting multiple CFS, please do so in separate posts.



    ~Resubmissions~


    -When resubmitting a custom style that was previously declined, you need to quote the original submission and bold the parts you changed in your new submission.

    -When a custom style is declined you'll need to wait 15 days to resubmit.



    ~Declined, Do Not Resubmit~


    -When your style was declined with a "Do Not Resubmit" note, you can't resubmit that style without the permission of the Staff member who checked that style.



    ~Limit on Submissions, Teachings and Specialties~


    -You need to be at least S-Class Ninja Rank and a member of the forum for 6 months to submit your Custom Fighting Styles.

    -You can only submit 2 Custom Fighting Styles of your own.

    -Each style can be taught to 6 people (according to the custom rules that each custom can be taught to 6 people each).

    -To teach someone the S-Rank moves of your custom fighting style you need to have a valid Sensei status (as stated in the customs rules).

    -Although a bio may use more than one Custom Fighting Style, each bio can only specialize in one fighting style. In other words, the minor boosts that a Fighting Style gives to your bio only apply if its specialized in it, which means only from one Custom Fighting Style.



    ~Custom Fighting Styles Techniques/Moves~


    -These are to be submitted in the Custom Jutsu Submission Thread and should follow the normal templates for a custom technique and all the rules of that thread.

    -Each Custom Fighting Style can have 10 techniques, which need to be submitted by the creator of the style.



    ~Custom Jutsu Users~


    -The posting of your approved Custom Fighting Style on your Custom Jutsu Thread is mandatory, along side with link to the post of approval.

    -Custom Fighting Styles don't count towards your 35 own Custom Techniques limit and each style can only be taught to 6 people (exception made for all the styles pre approved before this thread)



    ~Spam~

    -"Markers", or empty posts (with no actual custom style being submitted) created for the sole purpose of being edited later on, are strictly forbidden and shall be considered as nothing more than spam.

    -Any post that does not contain a custom style submission is considered spam and thereby falls under the violation of the global rules of Narutobase.



    ~Ripping and Copying~

    -You cannot copy or bluntly base your submissions in another members submission without his or hers permission. This is strictly forbidden and is a grave offense.

    -If you find a submission that you feel is too much like yours or that is clearly and bluntly a copy of any of yours, please contact one of the RP mods with the link to your style and the one that supposedly copies yours.



    ~Edits~


    -No one is allowed to edit his/her post after a moderator has already edited it. Resubmit if you feel that your style needs to be altered in some way.



    ~The Red Rule~


    -The red rule exists and you should check it if you don't know what it is. Bugging any RP mod regarding styles that were declined and to which you weren't required to contact the given mod, is a breaking of said rule. The techniques are declined for a reason which is most of the times explained even if we are not required to do so. This is never respected but I urge you to start taking this seriously.



    ~Disclaimer~


    -NB's moderators have every right to deny any style we wish without true explanation, because some styles submitted do not reach a certain criteria that we feel are needed for the submission to be accepted. Please do not complain, please do not argue, just take it as it is and please move on by creating something else. Most styles however will state a reason why it was not accepted.

    -This thread follows the same basic rules of the Custom Jutsu Submission Thread.


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    Re: ±±Custom Fighting Styles Submission±±

    Resubmitting with new template. Previously approved ±±here±±

    Genkotsu Namakemono | Lazy Fist
    Type: Gentaijutsu
    Background:
    Panda's aversion to physical effort and activity (mostly fueled by their dizzy-like movement and mostly drunken and playful behavior) lead them to become below average taijutsu fighters, relying more on their strong affinity to Genjutsu and Fire and Earth Ninjutsu. However, Panda Warriors soon saw that Taijutsu was the core ability to master by every fighter.
    So, by taking advantage of their inherent affinity with Genjutsu and unique form of movement they developed a new type of Taijutsu unique to them: Lazy Fist.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    This special type of Taijutsu relies on shallow, dull, soft and rapid movements to hit specific places in the opponents body, using their chakra and the impact to disturb the enemy's chakra flow. The disturbance of the chakra flow makes the enemy experience illusions, effectively putting the enemy under Genjutsus. This gives birth to a new technique all together: Gentaijutsu. The damage of a Lazy Fist move is a mixture of both physical damage (from impact) and the strain produced in the enemy's body by the Genjutsu placed upon impact. The impact serves as a medium to trigger the disturbance in the chakra flow through the chakra charged in that move.
    Lazy Fist moves are generally fast but a bit flamboyant, relying on soft rapid touches that inflict below average physical damage (if they did high physical damage, they would auto-release the enemy from the Genjutsu) but, by charging chakra into them, they disturb the enemy's chakra flow. The speed of the moves is slightly higher than that of normal taijutsu and the fighting stances are very soft and fluid instead of firm and strong. Agility and not strength is the core of Lazy Fist but, unlike most agility type taijutsu, the Lazy Fist user moves in a rather apparently uncoordinated manner, almost appearing drunk or dizzy.

    Lazy Fist stances (bigger drawing on the left is the basic stance). Credits of the drawing go to Deviantart's ~weremagnus

    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    -Masters of Lazy Fist have increased Agility, Reflexes and Movement Speed when compared to a normal Strong Fist Master
    -Lazy Fist users have generally great chakra control.
    -Lazy Fist moves envolve less physical strength that Strong Fist, thus why a Lazy Fist master without additional training in other forms, will always have less physical strength than a normal Strong Fist Master.

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    Scorps, our loyal moderator, gave on the date February the 24th of 2012 a request for a Patent on Custom Fighting Style (Lazy Fist). I, Nexus of the Custom Fighting Style Bureau, by the power invested in me by NarutoBase, after reading the submission, have decided that the submitted style satisfies all requirements, and am therefore giving him rightfully earned patent on this style by the following;


    Genkotsu Namakemono
    Powered by Nexus
    Copyright 2012, Scorps, NarutoBase.net

     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Fighting Styles Submission±±

    Yūgana ken | Graceful Fist
    Type: Nin-Taijutsu.
    Background: There once was a time, when there was little known about jutsu, or Kekkei Genkai. A simpler time, when most fought with their body's alone. Due to this many struggled to stay on top, creating different form's of Taijutsu. But one form stood above all, and was never defeated. This style was known as the Graceful Fist. Many relied on power, and simple physical strength. But one man realized that there was another way. A better, and more peaceful way to end a fued. Graceful Fist is purely based on patience, and striking with maximum effect. And this was the key to winning any fist fight.


    Inner working's and Movement's of the Graceful Fist style.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The Graceful Fist style consist's of three main rule's. The first rule is to stay Patient and Calm at all time's, it is alway's the key no matter what's headed your way, breaking this rule can be fatal. The second rule is to stay fluid, a stiff fighter is alway's inacurate. And the third rule, is to strike with Maximum effect, and we will get to that in the explanation here.

    Movement and Style: Graceful Fist is mainly performed with fluid movement of the body. The user will watch the opponent's every move, nothing get's past a Graceful Fist Master. You rarely block in this form of fighting, you will alway's counter. For example, if a simple quick punch is thrown, it can be blocked by simply moving the hostil fist out of the way with your wrist, this will also leave the opponent in an unstable position.

    Striking with Maximum effect: Graceful Fist user's also has knowledge over every single muscle that is in the human body, thus comes the striking with maximum effect. The strike will alway's be for an important area, more likely a pressure point.


    Nin-Taijutsu related effect's: Graceful Fist user's have the ability to create small wind gust's nearby their body with simply the swipe of an open palm. This was to knock the opponent off balance, for an opening to strike with maximum effort.


    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    - Graceful Fist user's have great stamina. Due to you having to move at all times fluidly regarding the style, stamina is built.
    - The user of Graceful fist will be able to take strong blow's, not only do you learn about pressure point's and muscular area's during the learning process, you must constantly resist these physical blow's. To be sure no Graceful fist user could really fight one another.
    - A Graceful Fist user does not require handseal's to create small wind gust's.
    - In The Training process, you will strike hard object's with merely a finger or two, practicing. Therefore the user's hand's and finger's will be rock hard.
    - A Graceful Fist user is not as strong as a normal strong fist user, so in a pure physical match, Graceful Fist is Outmatched.
    - You must be a master at the Graceful Fist to use it's wind technique.
    - Must be of at least Kage rank to master the Graceful Fist.



    ±± Declined ±± You need to develop the Ninjutsu part of this a bit more by explaining and developing the wind effects further.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Fighting Styles Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Yüme View Post
    Yūgana ken | Graceful Fist
    Type: Nin-Taijutsu.
    Background: There once was a time, when there was little known about jutsu, or Kekkei Genkai. A simpler time, when most fought with their body's alone. Due to this many struggled to stay on top, creating different form's of Taijutsu. But one form stood above all, and was never defeated. This style was known as the Graceful Fist. Many relied on power, and simple physical strength. But one man realized that there was another way. A better, and more peaceful way to end a fued. Graceful Fist is purely based on patience, and striking with maximum effect. And this was the key to winning any fist fight.


    Inner working's and Movement's of the Graceful Fist style.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The Graceful Fist style consist's of three main rule's. The first rule is to stay Patient and Calm at all time's, it is alway's the key no matter what's headed your way, breaking this rule can be fatal. The second rule is to stay fluid, a stiff fighter is alway's inacurate. And the third rule, is to strike with Maximum effect, and we will get to that in the explanation here.

    Movement and Style: Graceful Fist is mainly performed with fluid movement of the body. The user will watch the opponent's every move, nothing get's past a Graceful Fist Master. You rarely block in this form of fighting, you will alway's counter. For example, if a simple quick punch is thrown, it can be blocked by simply moving the hostil fist out of the way with your wrist, this will also leave the opponent in an unstable position.

    Striking with Maximum effect: Graceful Fist user's also has knowledge over every single muscle that is in the human body, thus comes the striking with maximum effect. The strike will alway's be for an important area, more likely a pressure point.


    Nin-Taijutsu related effect's: Graceful Fist user's have the ability to create small wind gust's nearby their body with simply the swipe of an open palm. This was to knock the opponent off balance, for an opening to strike with maximum effort.


    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    - Graceful Fist user's have great stamina. Due to you having to move at all times fluidly regarding the style, stamina is built.
    - The user of Graceful fist will be able to take strong blow's, not only do you learn about pressure point's and muscular area's during the learning process, you must constantly resist these physical blow's. To be sure no Graceful fist user could really fight one another.
    - A Graceful Fist user does not require handseal's to create small wind gust's.
    - In The Training process, you will strike hard object's with merely a finger or two, practicing. Therefore the user's hand's and finger's will be rock hard.
    - A Graceful Fist user is not as strong as a normal strong fist user, so in a pure physical match, Graceful Fist is Outmatched.
    - You must be a master at the Graceful Fist to use it's wind technique.
    - Must be of at least Kage rank to master the Graceful Fist.



    ±± Declined ±± You need to develop the Ninjutsu part of this a bit more by explaining and developing the wind effects further.


    Yume's permission to allow me to resubmit this: Link.

    Yūgana ken | Graceful Fist
    Type: Nin-Taijutsu.
    Background: There once was a time, when there was little known about jutsu, or Kekkei Genkai. A simpler time, when most fought with their body's alone. Due to this many struggled to stay on top, creating different form's of Taijutsu. But one form stood above all, and was never defeated. This style was known as the Graceful Fist. Many relied on power, and simple physical strength. But one man realized that there was another way. A better, and more peaceful way to end a fued. Graceful Fist is purely based on patience, and striking with maximum effect. And this was the key to winning any fist fight. Nathan came along this style from an old man that he met from his journey.

    Inner working's and Movement's of the Graceful Fist style.



    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The Graceful Fist style consist's of three main rule's. The first rule is to stay Patient and Calm at all time's, it is always the key no matter what's headed your way, breaking this rule can be fatal. The second rule is to stay fluid, a stiff fighter is always inaccurate. And the third rule, is to strike with Maximum effect, and we will get to that in the explanation here.

    Movement and Style: Graceful Fist is mainly performed with fluid movement of the body. The user will watch the opponent's every move, nothing get's past a Graceful Fist Master. You rarely block in this form of fighting, you will always counter. For example, if a simple quick punch is thrown, it can be blocked by simply moving the hostile fist out of the way with your wrist, this will also leave the opponent in an unstable position.

    Striking with Maximum effect: Graceful Fist user's also has knowledge over every single muscle that is in the human body, thus comes the striking with maximum effect. The strike will always be for an important area, more likely a pressure point.


    Nin-Taijutsu related effect's: Graceful Fist user's have the ability to create small wind gust's nearby their body with simply the swipe of an open palm. This was to knock the opponent off balance, for an opening to strike with maximum effort. The wind can be anything from a wind gust, to a small burst of wind, most if not all the wind techniques related around this style are all supplementary; and to enhance the possibilities of the Graceful Strike!

    Example Techniques:

    Yūgana Ken: | Graceful Fist: Muscle Strike
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description:
    The user will go into the Graceful Fist stance and by using their great knowledge about the muscles in the human body. The user will aim for whatever muscle and strike with a simple palm strike.
    Notes:
    - Must say which muscle they are planning to strike.

    Yūgana Ken: | Graceful Fist: Off Balancing Wind Strike
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C-rank
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    This technique allows the user to release a small burst of wind that is able to off balance the opponent, so the user can perform another Graceful Fist technique with more ease.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    - Graceful Fist user's have great stamina. Due to you having to move at all times fluidly regarding the style, stamina is built.
    - The user of Graceful fist will be able to take strong blow's, not only do you learn about pressure point's and muscular area's during the learning process, you must constantly resist these physical blow's. To be sure no Graceful fist user could really fight one another.
    - A Graceful Fist user does not require handseal's to create small wind gust's.
    - In The Training process, you will strike hard object's with merely a finger or two, practising. Therefore the user's hand's and finger's will be rock hard.
    - Those who wish to learn this style must go though one training session with the creator [Nathan]
    - A Graceful Fist user is not as strong as a normal strong fist user, so in a pure physical match, Graceful Fist is Outmatched.
    - Must be at least Kage [post count] to learn this style.
    - Must have both Taijutsu and Wind release completed.
    - Can only be taught by Nathan.



    ♦ Declined ♦ A bit better, but you still didn't clarify upon the wind relation. Simply saying it is for supplementary purposes isn't enough to cut it (no pun intended). Wind Release is mainly short to mid-ranged offensive techniques that combine brute force and keen precision to deal cutting and slashing damage. Try to find a way to combine the characteristics of wind to make the CFS more....graceful, to make the movements flow together more fluidly while still maintaining it's purpose.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Fighting Styles Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Nathan. View Post


    Yume's permission to allow me to resubmit this: Link.

    Yūgana ken | Graceful Fist
    Type: Nin-Taijutsu.
    Background: There once was a time, when there was little known about jutsu, or Kekkei Genkai. A simpler time, when most fought with their body's alone. Due to this many struggled to stay on top, creating different form's of Taijutsu. But one form stood above all, and was never defeated. This style was known as the Graceful Fist. Many relied on power, and simple physical strength. But one man realized that there was another way. A better, and more peaceful way to end a fued. Graceful Fist is purely based on patience, and striking with maximum effect. And this was the key to winning any fist fight. Nathan came along this style from an old man that he met from his journey.

    Inner working's and Movement's of the Graceful Fist style.



    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The Graceful Fist style consist's of three main rule's. The first rule is to stay Patient and Calm at all time's, it is always the key no matter what's headed your way, breaking this rule can be fatal. The second rule is to stay fluid, a stiff fighter is always inaccurate. And the third rule, is to strike with Maximum effect, and we will get to that in the explanation here.

    Movement and Style: Graceful Fist is mainly performed with fluid movement of the body. The user will watch the opponent's every move, nothing get's past a Graceful Fist Master. You rarely block in this form of fighting, you will always counter. For example, if a simple quick punch is thrown, it can be blocked by simply moving the hostile fist out of the way with your wrist, this will also leave the opponent in an unstable position.

    Striking with Maximum effect: Graceful Fist user's also has knowledge over every single muscle that is in the human body, thus comes the striking with maximum effect. The strike will always be for an important area, more likely a pressure point.


    Nin-Taijutsu related effect's: Graceful Fist user's have the ability to create small wind gust's nearby their body with simply the swipe of an open palm. This was to knock the opponent off balance, for an opening to strike with maximum effort. The wind can be anything from a wind gust, to a small burst of wind, most if not all the wind techniques related around this style are all supplementary; and to enhance the possibilities of the Graceful Strike!

    Example Techniques:

    Yūgana Ken: | Graceful Fist: Muscle Strike
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description:
    The user will go into the Graceful Fist stance and by using their great knowledge about the muscles in the human body. The user will aim for whatever muscle and strike with a simple palm strike.
    Notes:
    - Must say which muscle they are planning to strike.

    Yūgana Ken: | Graceful Fist: Off Balancing Wind Strike
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C-rank
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    This technique allows the user to release a small burst of wind that is able to off balance the opponent, so the user can perform another Graceful Fist technique with more ease.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    - Graceful Fist user's have great stamina. Due to you having to move at all times fluidly regarding the style, stamina is built.
    - The user of Graceful fist will be able to take strong blow's, not only do you learn about pressure point's and muscular area's during the learning process, you must constantly resist these physical blow's. To be sure no Graceful fist user could really fight one another.
    - A Graceful Fist user does not require handseal's to create small wind gust's.
    - In The Training process, you will strike hard object's with merely a finger or two, practising. Therefore the user's hand's and finger's will be rock hard.
    - Those who wish to learn this style must go though one training session with the creator [Nathan]
    - A Graceful Fist user is not as strong as a normal strong fist user, so in a pure physical match, Graceful Fist is Outmatched.
    - Must be at least Kage [post count] to learn this style.
    - Must have both Taijutsu and Wind release completed.
    - Can only be taught by Nathan.



    ♦ Declined ♦ A bit better, but you still didn't clarify upon the wind relation. Simply saying it is for supplementary purposes isn't enough to cut it (no pun intended). Wind Release is mainly short to mid-ranged offensive techniques that combine brute force and keen precision to deal cutting and slashing damage. Try to find a way to combine the characteristics of wind to make the CFS more....graceful, to make the movements flow together more fluidly while still maintaining it's purpose.
    - Went into more detail about the Nin-taijutsu effects.
    - Made new techniques for the above.

    Yume's permission to allow me to resubmit this: Link.

    Yūgana ken | Graceful Fist
    Type: Nin-Taijutsu.
    Background: There once was a time, when there was little known about jutsu, or Kekkei Genkai. A simpler time, when most fought with their body's alone. Due to this many struggled to stay on top, creating different form's of Taijutsu. But one form stood above all, and was never defeated. This style was known as the Graceful Fist. Many relied on power, and simple physical strength. But one man realized that there was another way. A better, and more peaceful way to end a fued. Graceful Fist is purely based on patience, and striking with maximum effect. And this was the key to winning any fist fight. Nathan came along this style from an old man that he met from his journey.

    Inner working's and Movement's of the Graceful Fist style.



    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The Graceful Fist style consist's of three main rule's. The first rule is to stay Patient and Calm at all time's, it is always the key no matter what's headed your way, breaking this rule can be fatal. The second rule is to stay fluid, a stiff fighter is always inaccurate. And the third rule, is to strike with Maximum effect, and we will get to that in the explanation here.

    Movement and Style: Graceful Fist is mainly performed with fluid movement of the body. The user will watch the opponent's every move, nothing get's past a Graceful Fist Master. You rarely block in this form of fighting, you will always counter. For example, if a simple quick punch is thrown, it can be blocked by simply moving the hostile fist out of the way with your wrist, this will also leave the opponent in an unstable position.

    Striking with Maximum effect: Graceful Fist user's also has knowledge over every single muscle that is in the human body, thus comes the striking with maximum effect. The strike will always be for an important area, more likely a pressure point.


    Nin-Taijutsu related effect's: By utilising the Wind aspect of Graceful Fist, a user of the style is able to use it to enhance their striking power and overall effectiveness of the style itself. By using shape manipulation, the user is able to mould his wind chakra into sharp projections that extends from his fingers/fist. Then, by using their knowledge of the human body and the placement of the muscles, a Graceful Fist user can strike the opponent in a vital area or muscle, and severe it through the skin by precisely slicing it with the Wind chakra. This allows a Graceful Fist user to cut the muscles of the arm/leg etcetera causing the opponent to be greatly harmed and lessen their overall ability to use their arms/legs, giving the Graceful Fist user an advantage in battle.

    The user of Graceful Fist is able to use Wind as a supplementary too. By coating their legs and arms in Wind chakra,and manipulating it with great precision, it allows the user to be more fluid when fighting. When coating the legs, it allows the Graceful Fist user to be light on his feet and move a bit faster and evade attacks from the opponent, thus countering with the Graceful Fist techniques giving the Graceful Fist user a upper hand.

    With both these aspects, Graceful Fist users are able to easily evade and strike back with great precision.


    Example Techniques:

    Yūgana Ken: | Graceful Fist: Muscle Strike
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description:
    The user will go into the Graceful Fist stance and by using their great knowledge about the muscles/pressure points in the human body. The user will aim for whatever muscle/pressure points and strike with a simple palm strike.
    Notes:
    - Must say which muscle they are planning to strike.

    Yūgana Ken: | Graceful Fist:
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    By coating the users limbs with wind chakra, the user will be able to move much more fluidly, when the legs are coated with wind chakra, it allows the user to be light on their feet, and able to use Graceful Fist techniques with more ease, and move around with that same ease.
    - Can only be used for Graceful Fist techniques, nothing else.

    Yūgana Ken: | Graceful Fist:
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: C-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    The user will gather a small amount of wind chakra around their hand and/or fingertips, and by using their great understanding of the muscles and pressure points, the user will place their hand on their target muscle or pressure point and the wind chakra will seep out of the users fingertips causing a cut around the skin, allowing Graceful Fist techniques to do more pain to the target.
    - Can only be used for Graceful Fist techniques, nothing else.

    Additional effects:
    - Graceful Fist user's have great stamina. Due to you having to move at all times fluidly regarding the style, stamina is built.
    - The user of Graceful fist will be able to take strong blow's, not only do you learn about pressure point's and muscular area's during the learning process, you must constantly resist these physical blow's. To be sure no Graceful fist user could really fight one another.
    - A Graceful Fist user does not require hand-seals to use the Nin-Taijutsu of this style.
    - In The Training process, you will strike hard object's with merely a finger or two, practising. Therefore the user's hand's and finger's will be rock hard.

    Restrictions:
    - Those who wish to learn this style must go though one training session with the creator [Nathan]
    - A Graceful Fist user is not as strong as a normal strong fist user, so in a pure physical match, Graceful Fist is Outmatched.
    - Must be at least Kage [post count] to learn this style.
    - Must have both Taijutsu and Wind release completed.
    - Can only be taught by Nathan.


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    Ekōken Ryū)| Echo Fist Style

    Type: Nintaijutsu

    Background: Echo Fist Style is a form of nintaijutsu that utilizes sound ninjutsu with taijutsu forms and attacks. By utilizing special bell chamber equipment attached to their arms and legs much like Dosu of the sound ninja in the chuunin examinations used. By encouperating with the movement of taijutsu and focusing their sound chakra into these chambers and when applying movement by simple stances or actual physical attacks the user releases the energy in the chambers to apply various attacks to the opponent either agumenting strategic methods of decreasing general capabilities of the opponent such as their reactions or balance or merely delivering strong attacks to cause physical damage.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The Style mainly revolves around the fluid movements of taijutsu to deliver swift and accurate attacks and by resonating their sound ninjutsu chakra within the special bell chambers to enhance the potency of their sound chakra.

    (Ekōken ryū: Kyōmei Toppū) - Echo Fist Style: Resonating Flurry
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 15
    Damage points: N/A (+10 for physical attack)
    Description: The user will utlize any form of martial arts stance dependant upon the situation they require its form and by resonating and concentrating their chakra within the bell chamber on their arm or their leg they then use the fluid movement of the stance or merely a physical attack to deliver a sound wave that affects the opponents affecting their sense of hearing, balance and visual perception and inducing a state of confusion that prevents them from utilzing techniques that require a specific range of attack or accuracy.
    Note: The additional effects given last for two turns.

    (Ekōken ryū: Memai) - Echo Fist Style: Vertigo
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive, Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will utlize any form of martial arts stance dependant upon the situation they require its form and by resonating and concentrating their chakra within the bell chamber on their arm or their leg they then use the fluid movement of the stance or merely a physical attack to deliver a sonic blast that causes physical damage sending the opponent flying a several feet but also affects the opponents sense of balance throwing them into a state of vertigo that then iinduces physical sickness and reducing ones capabilities and due to a state of weakness attacks afflicted upon the opponent can deal double the ammount of damage. (Only when making actual direct contact and not affecting if collision with another technique)
    Note: opponent can only us A rank and below the following turn and after being struck immediately is struck with sickness resulting in a reduced reaction time lasting a single turn.
    Note: User can only use this technique every two turns.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    - One must have Completed Taijutsu and NB taijutsu(not including restricted NB taijutsu)
    - Once must have completed Sound ninjutsu training
    - Must be Kage rank
    - Can only be taught by Zenryoku and those who have been given permission by him that have completed the training.
    - One must have on their biography the special bell attachments (example: Zen)
     
         
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    Sogeki Geijutsu 狙撃兵 分身の術 - Sniper Arts

    Type: Kyūjutsu
    Background: Sniper Arts also known as Kyūjutsu/Kyudo, is the traditional Japanese martial art of wielding a bow. Although the samurai of the Land of Iron are perhaps best known for their swordsmanship with a katana (kenjutsu), kyūjutsu was actually considered a more vital skill for a significant portion of Ninja World War history. Later on, the traditional martial art got introduced with ninjutsu and chakra usage. That's when bow wielding ninjas started combining archery with their ninjutsu creating very useful and powerful techniques. Sogeki Geijutsu is practiced in many different ninja academies, some of which descend from military shooting and others that descend from ceremonial or contemplative practice. Therefore, the emphasis is different. Some emphasize aesthetics and others efficiency. Contemplative academies teach the form as a meditation in action. In certain academies, to shoot correctly will result inevitably in hitting the desired target. For this a phrase seisha hicchū, "true shooting, certain hitting", is used. According to the Nippon Kyudo Federation (World Government of Archery) the supreme goal of kyudo is the state of shin-zen-bi, roughly "truth-goodness-beauty", which can be approximated as: when archers shoot correctly (i.e. truthfully) with virtuous spirit and attitude toward all persons and all things which relate to kyudo (i.e. with goodness), beautiful shooting is realized naturally. A master sniper will gain increased tracking speeds to help them keep up with faster targets. This was achieved by being so used to tracking moving targets throughout the years.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The whole style mainly revolves around the infusion of chakra into arrows, create arrows out of a certain elemental/pure affinity or the usage of Ninjutsu and Kyūjutsu to create combinations.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:

    - A Master Sniper will gain increased tracking speeds to help them keep up with faster targets.
    - The arrows used in Sniper Arts travel at the speed of a regular arrow unless enhanced by certain techniques.

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    Houtai Gigei 巻芸 Bandage Arts:

    Type: Houtaiutsu
    Background:Bandage Arts is a special type of fighting style in which the user utilizes mummy-like bandages wrapped around his/her body for defensive or offensive techniques. The process is done by focusing chakra into and around the bandages to freely manipulate them or enhance them with certain elemental affinities like earth style to enhance its defensive properties or wind style to increase its cutting power. This style was inspired by the bandage manipulation seen used by Hiruku and also by Lee himself when he binds his opponents when performing the hidden lotus however on more developed scale.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: Extreme chakra control to enhance/manipulate/cut/bind with the bandages.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:

    - Masters of Houtai Gigei have great multitasking capabilities due to their daily taijutsu and manipulation of bandages combinations along with a great amount of agility to perform fluid and effortless movements.
    - Must have a Biography with bandages wrapped around their body.
    - Mastered regular Ninjutsu
    - This style can only be taught by a Houtai Gigei Master

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    Akairo Suna Tenohira 赤色砂掌 - Red Sand Palm
    Type:
    Taijutsu
    Background:
    The Red Sand Palm techniques were derived from a hand hardening technique used to aid in the training and development of Wing Chun. The purpose of the developing this new technique was to both reduce the rate of injury to those training Wing Chun and increase the effectiveness of the art itself. Red Sand Palm's hand hardening came with extremely effective and unexpected consequences, not only are the hands hardened enough to crush stones without even the slightest mar, they also generate unnatural amounts of heat and pressure. The Red Sand Palm became its own system of attacks and defenses used by masters in conjunction with the Wing Chun style. However the Red Sand Palm was quickly barred from being used in national tournaments due to the extreme danger to the opponent. The practitioner of the Red Sand Palm does not need to make contact with the opponent to cause harm, due to the heat and pressure generated, and with the advent of modified techniques such as Iron Sand Palm, which causes the struck targets internal energy network to boil, The Chinese Emperor declared that such techniques were contrary to the purpose of the tournaments and therefore shall be marked as forbidden for use outside of battlefield during times of war. Taoist and Buddhist monks to this day can still be found training these techniques in both northern China and Japan, there have also been reports of descendants of the masters now living in the United States still training in these forbidden techniques.

    Narutoverse tie-in: The Hyuuga clan uses a much more advanced, chakra only version of this style known as Jūken, 柔拳 (Gentle Fist), in combination with their Byakugan the Hyuuga have precise visual knowledge of the accuracy and effects of their attacks.
    However, there are very important differences between Gentle Fist and Red Sand Palm:
    • Members of the Hyuuga clan force controlled amounts of chakra through tenketsu, and use that chakra to damage internal organs or change chakra flow, increasing or cutting it off completely. Red Sand Palm style fighters do not have the ability to control their chakra on that level (unless specifically trained to do so via NB Med School).
    • The Gentle Fist style is based upon a fighting style that is extremely similar to Tai Chi Chuan, which was an opposing style and almost directly antipodean to Wing Chun, which is what Red Sand Palm was developed from.
    • Gentle Fist users rely on precision chakra control and extremely accurate attacks to incapacitate their opponents, whereas the Red Sand Palm users rely on the force of their attacks to create areas of high air pressure and friction generated in their chakra's movements to create heat.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The initial purpose of Red Sand Palm is to aid in the defense against incoming attacks of all physical types. However the secondary purpose of this style of combat is to minimize the effort needed to finish a fight, quickly ending combat by way of incapacitating the opponent. Through the use of intense months or even years of physical training and advanced chakra control, those trained in the style of Red Sand Palm can generate great amounts of heat and pressure simply through their movements.

    Working their way up in strength and tolerance for the training, beginners start out plunging their hands into a pale of fine dust like silt. This is done until the student is able to retrieve a single grain of (dyed red) rice, unscathed, from the bottom of the pale in one strike. The next stage in this training is instead of the fine silt, the student will repeat the training using beach sands that have not been moistened. Again this stage in the training takes as long as necessary until the red grain of rice is retrieved unscathed. Moving further on from here replaces the beach sand with sands from the mountain tops, after that is the pebbles from the river shallows, followed by coarse stones from the mountain passes, which, when completed, is replaced by almost completely dry clay mud (it is this stage that builds formless pressure). After the clay, the student should now be able to move small objects simply with the pressure generated by the movements of their hands. Students that have achieved this level of skill are now known as "Users of Red Sand Palm".
    The next stage of training consists of much of the same training, however the pale is replaced with a large bucket almost a meter in height, and the one grain of rice is increased to three. The materials this time start at the stage of coarse stones from the mountain pass, and are increased to large fist sized rocks from the rivers and streams, then on to coarse rocks of increasing density (slate to granite), finally ending on a mixture of large old river rocks and coarse boulders from the mountain tops. Once a student has mastered the ability to retrieve the rice unscathed from this stage of training they are able to use their newly masters skills to knock over opponents during a fight, causing searing pain and interrupted chakra flow to areas contacted (without any permanent damage), these students are known as "Masters of Red Sand Palm".
    The final known stage of training consists of very intense range training. Those who complete this training are known as "Grand-Masters of Red Sand Palm", there are no known living Grand-Masters of this style at this time however there is extremely well documented routines that the late Grand-Masters compiled. Upon attaining the status of Master, individualized training regiments are created from the documents in order to continue training.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    • All hand based taijutsu* moves gain a 2:1 speed bonus over standard taijutsu users, and range bonus.
    • Red Sand Palm taijutsu* moves can be used not only to attack, but defend against physical attacks.
    • When using Red Sand Palm style all non-genjutsu moves cost additional chakra per round.
    • Users of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 1/2 meter for all had based taijutsu* moves (no grabs of course). Also Users cannot interact** directly with chakra using this style alone.
    • Masters of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 1 meter for all hand based taijutsu* moves (again, no grabs of course). Masters can directly interact** with chakra for one of three moves, while using this fighting style.
    • Grand-Masters of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 3 meters for all hand based taijutsu* moves (once more, no grabs of course). Grand-Masters can directly interact** with chakra while using this fighting style.
    • This martial arts combat style can only be trained by myself or a Master of Red Sand Palm who also holds Sensei status, or Zenryoku once he gains understanding of the philosophy. HOWEVER, ALL interested students MUST be recommended by a Sensei and approved by me PRIOR to beginning training.


    Examples:
    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Henkō) - Red Sand Palm: Deflection
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 22
    Damage: 30
    Description: Using a quick ridge hand slash, the user is able to knock away an incoming physical attack, such as (Doton: Fist Rock Technique) with out the attack coming into contact with the user. The deflection of such an attack leaves the opponent open and vulnerable to attack. Standard taijutsu users will not be able to defend against a deflected attack.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can only deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.

    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Tsuyoi Te) - Red Sand Palm: Strong Hand
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 38
    Damage: 60
    Description: With a forceful thrust the user can knock off balance or even knock to the ground the opponent from up to a distance of 1 - 3 meters depending upon style mastery. This attack deals a moderate amount of damage at distance (up to 40) but deals its true fate to opponents within physical striking distance (full 60) plus causes a searing pain to shoot through the area struck, leaving a definitive hand print seemingly branded on the skin.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.
    *Does not use fire or katon chakra to burn the target.
    *The attack does not actually burn the opponent.

    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Hakai) - Red Sand Palm: Destruction
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 80
    Damage: 110
    Description: Quickly sliding the palms across one another horizontally while using the fully mastered techniques of the Red Sand Palm, the user is able to physically slice the air and all physical objects in front of him up to mid range, cutting all physical bodies through and through. When used to defend, this attack even has the ability to split in tween, direct: katon, suiton, raiton and fuuton based attacks, up to S rank, causing the attacks to miss the user.
    *This attack effects an area of 2 meters at a range of 3 meters, and tapers down to the spread of the users arms at a range of 0 meters.
    *Without the ability to void the air in between the opponents, this attack cannot be avoided within the 3 meter range.
    *If hit but not incapacitated by this attack the target will experience a severe, almost debilitating, burning sensation throughout their midsection.
    *This attack can only be used twice per battle, not within 3 full turns of one another.
    *This attack leaves the user near exhaustion physically, greatly slowing his movements and making and Red Sand Palm attacks useless for the next turn.
    *The user must be a Grand-Master of Red Sand Palm to use this attack.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.

    * -- Taijutsu implies physical attacks involving striking, kicking, grappling and submission, whether they are from a jutsu list or not.
    ** -- Here interacting with chakra, simply implies the ability to mold various types of chakra with the hands while using this specific fighting style. By not being able to directly interact with chakra, you must use some conducting medium in order to channel chakra through your hands. For example; medical ninjas would not be able to use a chakra scalpel while using this fighting style unless they've attained the Master or Grand-Master status.

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    What you explain is nothing more than a simple Taijutsu. You go into details about background, training, how one gets to that level, etc etc. but the core of this is that you still haven't explained why this is different from strong fist. I don't also understand where the connection to the gentle fist came from.
     
         
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    Akairo Suna Tenohira 赤色砂掌 - Red Sand Palm
    Type:
    Taijutsu
    Background:
    The Red Sand Palm techniques were derived from a hand hardening technique used to aid in the training and development of Wing Chun. The purpose of the developing this new technique was to both reduce the rate of injury to those training Wing Chun and increase the effectiveness of the art itself. Red Sand Palm's hand hardening came with extremely effective and unexpected consequences, not only are the hands hardened enough to crush stones without even the slightest mar, they also generate unnatural amounts of heat and pressure. The Red Sand Palm became its own system of attacks and defenses used by masters in conjunction with the Wing Chun style. However the Red Sand Palm was quickly barred from being used in national tournaments due to the extreme danger to the opponent. The practitioner of the Red Sand Palm does not need to make contact with the opponent to cause harm, due to the heat and pressure generated, and with the advent of modified techniques such as Iron Sand Palm, which causes the struck targets internal energy network to boil, The Chinese Emperor declared that such techniques were contrary to the purpose of the tournaments and therefore shall be marked as forbidden for use outside of battlefield during times of war. Taoist and Buddhist monks to this day can still be found training these techniques in both northern China and Japan, there have also been reports of descendants of the masters now living in the United States still training in these forbidden techniques.

    Narutoverse tie-in: The Hyuuga clan uses a much more advanced, chakra only version of this style known as Jūken, 柔拳 (Gentle Fist), in combination with their Byakugan the Hyuuga have precise visual knowledge of the accuracy and effects of their attacks.
    However, there are very important differences between Gentle Fist and Red Sand Palm:
    • Members of the Hyuuga clan force controlled amounts of chakra through tenketsu, and use that chakra to damage internal organs or change chakra flow, increasing or cutting it off completely. Red Sand Palm style fighters do not have the ability to control their chakra on that level (unless specifically trained to do so via NB Med School).
    • The Gentle Fist style is based upon a fighting style that is extremely similar to Tai Chi Chuan, which was an opposing style and almost directly antipodean to Wing Chun, which is what Red Sand Palm was developed from.
    • Gentle Fist users rely on precision chakra control and extremely accurate attacks to incapacitate their opponents, whereas the Red Sand Palm users rely on the force of their attacks to create areas of high air pressure and friction generated in their chakra's movements to create heat.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The initial purpose of Red Sand Palm is to aid in the defense against incoming attacks of all physical types. However the secondary purpose of this style of combat is to minimize the effort needed to finish a fight, quickly ending combat by way of incapacitating the opponent. Through the use of intense months or even years of physical training and advanced chakra control, those trained in the style of Red Sand Palm can generate great amounts of heat and pressure simply through their movements.

    Working their way up in strength and tolerance for the training, beginners start out plunging their hands into a pale of fine dust like silt. This is done until the student is able to retrieve a single grain of (dyed red) rice, unscathed, from the bottom of the pale in one strike. The next stage in this training is instead of the fine silt, the student will repeat the training using beach sands that have not been moistened. Again this stage in the training takes as long as necessary until the red grain of rice is retrieved unscathed. Moving further on from here replaces the beach sand with sands from the mountain tops, after that is the pebbles from the river shallows, followed by coarse stones from the mountain passes, which, when completed, is replaced by almost completely dry clay mud (it is this stage that builds formless pressure). After the clay, the student should now be able to move small objects simply with the pressure generated by the movements of their hands. Students that have achieved this level of skill are now known as "Users of Red Sand Palm".
    The next stage of training consists of much of the same training, however the pale is replaced with a large bucket almost a meter in height, and the one grain of rice is increased to three. The materials this time start at the stage of coarse stones from the mountain pass, and are increased to large fist sized rocks from the rivers and streams, then on to coarse rocks of increasing density (slate to granite), finally ending on a mixture of large old river rocks and coarse boulders from the mountain tops. Once a student has mastered the ability to retrieve the rice unscathed from this stage of training they are able to use their newly masters skills to knock over opponents during a fight, causing searing pain and interrupted chakra flow to areas contacted (without any permanent damage), these students are known as "Masters of Red Sand Palm".
    The final known stage of training consists of very intense range training. Those who complete this training are known as "Grand-Masters of Red Sand Palm", there are no known living Grand-Masters of this style at this time however there is extremely well documented routines that the late Grand-Masters compiled. Upon attaining the status of Master, individualized training regiments are created from the documents in order to continue training.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    • All hand based taijutsu* moves gain a 2:1 speed bonus over standard taijutsu users, and range bonus.
    • Red Sand Palm taijutsu* moves can be used not only to attack, but defend against physical attacks.
    • When using Red Sand Palm style all non-genjutsu moves cost additional chakra per round.
    • Users of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 1/2 meter for all had based taijutsu* moves (no grabs of course). Also Users cannot interact** directly with chakra using this style alone.
    • Masters of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 1 meter for all hand based taijutsu* moves (again, no grabs of course). Masters can directly interact** with chakra for one of three moves, while using this fighting style.
    • Grand-Masters of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 3 meters for all hand based taijutsu* moves (once more, no grabs of course). Grand-Masters can directly interact** with chakra while using this fighting style.
    • This martial arts combat style can only be trained by myself or a Master of Red Sand Palm who also holds Sensei status, or Zenryoku once he gains understanding of the philosophy. HOWEVER, ALL interested students MUST be recommended by a Sensei and approved by me PRIOR to beginning training.


    Examples:
    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Henkō) - Red Sand Palm: Deflection
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 22
    Damage: 30
    Description: Using a quick ridge hand slash, the user is able to knock away an incoming physical attack, such as (Doton: Fist Rock Technique) with out the attack coming into contact with the user. The deflection of such an attack leaves the opponent open and vulnerable to attack. Standard taijutsu users will not be able to defend against a deflected attack.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can only deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.

    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Tsuyoi Te) - Red Sand Palm: Strong Hand
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 38
    Damage: 60
    Description: With a forceful thrust the user can knock off balance or even knock to the ground the opponent from up to a distance of 1 - 3 meters depending upon style mastery. This attack deals a moderate amount of damage at distance (up to 40) but deals its true fate to opponents within physical striking distance (full 60) plus causes a searing pain to shoot through the area struck, leaving a definitive hand print seemingly branded on the skin.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.
    *Does not use fire or katon chakra to burn the target.
    *The attack does not actually burn the opponent.

    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Hakai) - Red Sand Palm: Destruction
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 80
    Damage: 110
    Description: Quickly sliding the palms across one another horizontally while using the fully mastered techniques of the Red Sand Palm, the user is able to physically slice the air and all physical objects in front of him up to mid range, cutting all physical bodies through and through. When used to defend, this attack even has the ability to split in tween, direct: katon, suiton, raiton and fuuton based attacks, up to S rank, causing the attacks to miss the user.
    *This attack effects an area of 2 meters at a range of 3 meters, and tapers down to the spread of the users arms at a range of 0 meters.
    *Without the ability to void the air in between the opponents, this attack cannot be avoided within the 3 meter range.
    *If hit but not incapacitated by this attack the target will experience a severe, almost debilitating, burning sensation throughout their midsection.
    *This attack can only be used twice per battle, not within 3 full turns of one another.
    *This attack leaves the user near exhaustion physically, greatly slowing his movements and making and Red Sand Palm attacks useless for the next turn.
    *The user must be a Grand-Master of Red Sand Palm to use this attack.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.

    * -- Taijutsu implies physical attacks involving striking, kicking, grappling and submission, whether they are from a jutsu list or not.
    ** -- Here interacting with chakra, simply implies the ability to mold various types of chakra with the hands while using this specific fighting style. By not being able to directly interact with chakra, you must use some conducting medium in order to channel chakra through your hands. For example; medical ninjas would not be able to use a chakra scalpel while using this fighting style unless they've attained the Master or Grand-Master status.

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    What you explain is nothing more than a simple Taijutsu. You go into details about background, training, how one gets to that level, etc etc. but the core of this is that you still haven't explained why this is different from strong fist. I don't also understand where the connection to the gentle fist came from.
    Resubmitting, I reformatted the description in an attempt to better explain the style

    Akairo Suna Tenohira 赤色砂掌 - Red Sand Palm
    Type:
    Taijutsu
    Background:
    The Red Sand Palm techniques were derived from a hand hardening technique used to aid in the training and development of Wing Chun. The purpose of the developing this new technique was to both reduce the rate of injury to those training Wing Chun and increase the effectiveness of the art itself. Red Sand Palm's hand hardening came with extremely effective and unexpected consequences, not only are the hands hardened enough to crush stones without even the slightest mar, they also generate unnatural amounts of heat and pressure. The Red Sand Palm became its own system of attacks and defenses used by masters in conjunction with the Wing Chun style. However the Red Sand Palm was quickly barred from being used in national tournaments due to the extreme danger to the opponent. The practitioner of the Red Sand Palm does not need to make contact with the opponent to cause harm, due to the heat and pressure generated, and with the advent of modified techniques such as Iron Sand Palm, which causes the struck targets internal energy network to boil, The Chinese Emperor declared that such techniques were contrary to the purpose of the tournaments and therefore shall be marked as forbidden for use outside of battlefield during times of war. Taoist and Buddhist monks to this day can still be found training these techniques in both northern China and Japan, there have also been reports of descendants of the masters now living in the United States still training in these forbidden techniques.

    Narutoverse tie-in: Red Sand Palm can hit without hitting, and burn without burning, similarly, but very differently, to the the Hyuuga clan, which uses a much more advanced chakra only version of this style, known as Jūken, 柔拳 (Gentle Fist), in combination with their Byakugan the Hyuuga have precise visual knowledge of the accuracy and effects of their attacks.
    There are very important differences between Gentle Fist and Red Sand Palm:
    • Members of the Hyuuga clan force controlled amounts of chakra through tenketsu, and use that chakra to damage internal organs or change chakra flow, increasing or cutting it off completely. Red Sand Palm style fighters do not have the ability to control their chakra on that level (unless specifically trained to do so via NB Med School).
    • The Gentle Fist style is based upon a fighting style that is extremely similar to Tai Chi Chuan, which was an opposing style and almost directly antipodean to Wing Chun, which is what Red Sand Palm was developed from.
    • Gentle Fist users rely on precision chakra control and extremely accurate attacks to incapacitate their opponents, whereas the Red Sand Palm users rely on the force of their attacks to create areas of high air pressure and friction generated in their chakra's movements to create heat.

    Inner Workings of the Style:
    The initial purpose of Red Sand Palm is to aid in the defense against incoming attacks of all physical types. However the secondary purpose of this style of combat is to minimize the effort needed to finish a fight, quickly ending combat by way of incapacitating the opponent. Through the use of intense months or even years of physical training and advanced chakra control, those trained in the style of Red Sand Palm can generate great amounts of heat and pressure simply through their movements.

    Working their way up in strength and tolerance for the training, beginners start out plunging their hands into a pale of fine dust like silt. This is done until the student is able to retrieve a single grain of (dyed red) rice, unscathed, from the bottom of the pale in one strike. The next stage in this training is instead of the fine silt, the student will repeat the training using beach sands that have not been moistened. Again this stage in the training takes as long as necessary until the red grain of rice is retrieved unscathed. Moving further on from here replaces the beach sand with sands from the mountain tops, after that is the pebbles from the river shallows, followed by coarse stones from the mountain passes, which, when completed, is replaced by almost completely dry clay mud (it is this stage that builds formless pressure). After the clay, the student should now be able to move small objects simply with the pressure generated by the movements of their hands. Students that have achieved this level of skill are now known as "Users of Red Sand Palm".
    The next stage of training consists of much of the same training, however the pale is replaced with a large bucket almost a meter in height, and the one grain of rice is increased to three. The materials this time start at the stage of coarse stones from the mountain pass, and are increased to large fist sized rocks from the rivers and streams, then on to coarse rocks of increasing density (slate to granite), finally ending on a mixture of large old river rocks and coarse boulders from the mountain tops. Once a student has mastered the ability to retrieve the rice unscathed from this stage of training they are able to use their newly masters skills to knock over opponents during a fight, causing searing pain and interrupted chakra flow to areas contacted (without any permanent damage), these students are known as "Masters of Red Sand Palm".
    The final known stage of training consists of very intense range training. Those who complete this training are known as "Grand-Masters of Red Sand Palm", there are no known living Grand-Masters of this style at this time however there is extremely well documented routines that the late Grand-Masters compiled. Upon attaining the status of Master, individualized training regiments are created from the documents in order to continue training.

    Description of the Abilities:
    Red Sand Palm "Users" have the ability to generate a impressive amount of pressure through the speed and specific movements of each attack. With each of these attacks there is also a small amount of heat created by the friction of his chakra through the air around them. Fighters of this level have the ability to move small objects without actually touching them, by using the techniques developed through the specific training. (pressure and friction)
    For help in understanding think of this example: When you punch at a feather falling through the air in front of you, the air pressure created in front of your fist will move the feather.
    Red Sand Palm "Masters" have the ability to generate an great deal of pressure and heat through the speed, friction, and specific movements of each attack. Fighters at this level have the ability to knock over an opponent with the pressure of their attacks, also the heat generated by the friction of their chakra will cause a searing sensation around the point of impact, and because the friction is generated by the master's chakra itself, the connected attacks cause very short term disruptions in the chakra flow in the area affected.
    For help in understanding think of this example: For the chakra friction, think of an extreme version of Mr. Miagi from the Karate-Kid.
    Red Sand Palm "Grand-Masters" have the ability to create extreme amounts of pressure and heat through the speed and friction of their specific movements. Fighters attaining this level of skill will have specially attuned training that will grant (mod-approved) account specific of individualized abilities that far surpass that of the standard Masters but remain the same in realm.
    For help in understanding think of this example: There is a story that my Sifu tells, that talks about an ancient Grand-Master who had the ability to cut a spear in half from several steps away, burning the ends of the fresh cut at the same time. NOTE: This is just an example to aid in understanding, not an actual ability. As stated all specific abilities will need to be mod-approved prior to Grand-Master training.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    • All hand based taijutsu* moves gain a 2:1 speed bonus over standard taijutsu users, and range bonus.
    • Red Sand Palm taijutsu* moves can be used not only to attack, but defend against physical attacks.
    • When using Red Sand Palm style all non-genjutsu moves cost additional chakra per round.
    • Users of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 1/2 meter for all had based taijutsu* moves (no grabs of course). Also Users cannot interact** directly with chakra using this style alone.
    • Masters of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 1 meter for all hand based taijutsu* moves (again, no grabs of course). Masters can directly interact** with chakra for one of three moves, while using this fighting style.
    • Grand-Masters of Red Sand Palm gain a taijutsu range bonus of 3 meters for all hand based taijutsu* moves (once more, no grabs of course). Grand-Masters can directly interact** with chakra while using this fighting style.
    • This martial arts combat style can only be trained by myself or a Master of Red Sand Palm who also holds Sensei status, or Zenryoku once he gains understanding of the philosophy. HOWEVER, ALL interested students MUST be recommended by a Sensei and approved by me PRIOR to beginning training.


    Examples:
    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Henkō) - Red Sand Palm: Deflection
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 22
    Damage: 30
    Description: Using a quick ridge hand slash, the user is able to knock away an incoming physical attack, such as (Doton: Fist Rock Technique) with out the attack coming into contact with the user. The deflection of such an attack leaves the opponent open and vulnerable to attack. Standard taijutsu users will not be able to defend against a deflected attack.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can only deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.

    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Tsuyoi Te) - Red Sand Palm: Strong Hand
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 38
    Damage: 60
    Description: With a forceful thrust the user can knock off balance or even knock to the ground the opponent from up to a distance of 1 - 3 meters depending upon style mastery. This attack deals a moderate amount of damage at distance (up to 40) but deals its true fate to opponents within physical striking distance (full 60) plus causes a searing pain to shoot through the area struck, leaving a definitive hand print seemingly branded on the skin.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.
    *Does not use fire or katon chakra to burn the target.
    *The attack does not actually burn the opponent.

    (Akairo Suna Tenohira: Hakai) - Red Sand Palm: Destruction
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid
    Chakra: 80
    Damage: 110
    Description: Quickly sliding the palms across one another horizontally while using the fully mastered techniques of the Red Sand Palm, the user is able to physically slice the air and all physical objects in front of him up to mid range, cutting all physical bodies through and through. When used to defend, this attack even has the ability to split in tween, direct: katon, suiton, raiton and fuuton based attacks, up to S rank, causing the attacks to miss the user.
    *This attack effects an area of 2 meters at a range of 3 meters, and tapers down to the spread of the users arms at a range of 0 meters.
    *Without the ability to void the air in between the opponents, this attack cannot be avoided within the 3 meter range.
    *If hit but not incapacitated by this attack the target will experience a severe, almost debilitating, burning sensation throughout their midsection.
    *This attack can only be used twice per battle, not within 3 full turns of one another.
    *This attack leaves the user near exhaustion physically, greatly slowing his movements and making and Red Sand Palm attacks useless for the next turn.
    *The user must be a Grand-Master of Red Sand Palm to use this attack.
    *Can only be taught according to the Red Sand Palm training restrictions.
    *Can deflect physical attacks of equal or lesser rank.
    *Cannot be used as both an attack and defense in the same turn.

    * -- Taijutsu implies physical attacks involving striking, kicking, grappling and submission, whether they are from a jutsu list or not.
    ** -- Here interacting with chakra, simply implies the ability to mold various types of chakra with the hands while using this specific fighting style. By not being able to directly interact with chakra, you must use some conducting medium in order to channel chakra through your hands. For example; medical ninjas would not be able to use a chakra scalpel while using this fighting style unless they've attained the Master or Grand-Master status.

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    Don't resubmit. The same key elements of my last check weren't changed.
     
         
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    (Hiryū geijutsu)Fire Dragon Arts
    Type:Taijutsu*
    Background:The fire dragon arts where made by the a member of the Uchiha clan known as Ian Uchiha.Its is the mix of Tai-Jutsu with the Katon Element turn the fists and legs of the user on fire.The Users of this style are able to manipulate the flames and and send small fireballs with use head seals.This style was made to be the Uchiha clan version of the Hyuga clan Gentle Fist.But the the Uchiha developed a more deadly type of style being able to mix there Taijustu and Katon Relese.
    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:The inner works of the style is sending katon chakra to the legs and fists of the user so he can manipulate the flames and add more power.The user is basically using normal Taijutsu but also mixing in there Katon chakra to add more fierce force to the blow.Here is a diagram for a better look:
    Additional effects and Restrictions: *
    -Can only be used on a Uchiha bio
    -Must have started Katon training*
    -Can only be taught by XxFallenUchihaxX
    -Only Katon Jutsus can be used while using this style
    -Can absorb B rank and down Katon Jutsus
    -Can be stopped by B rank and higher Jutsus


    ±± Declined ±± This is a Nintaijutsu. As for the restrictions and additional effects you are confusing this with a technique. This is a fighting style. Read my submission and mathias to get an idea of what or how to do it.
     
         
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    Quote Originally Posted by XxFallenUchihaxX View Post
    (Hiryū geijutsu)Fire Dragon Arts
    Type:Taijutsu*
    Background:The fire dragon arts where made by the a member of the Uchiha clan known as Ian Uchiha.Its is the mix of Tai-Jutsu with the Katon Element turn the fists and legs of the user on fire.The Users of this style are able to manipulate the flames and and send small fireballs with use head seals.This style was made to be the Uchiha clan version of the Hyuga clan Gentle Fist.But the the Uchiha developed a more deadly type of style being able to mix there Taijustu and Katon Relese.
    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:The inner works of the style is sending katon chakra to the legs and fists of the user so he can manipulate the flames and add more power.The user is basically using normal Taijutsu but also mixing in there Katon chakra to add more fierce force to the blow.Here is a diagram for a better look:
    Additional effects and Restrictions: *
    -Can only be used on a Uchiha bio
    -Must have started Katon training*
    -Can only be taught by XxFallenUchihaxX
    -Only Katon Jutsus can be used while using this style
    -Can absorb B rank and down Katon Jutsus
    -Can be stopped by B rank and higher Jutsus


    [color=royalblue]±± Declined ±± This is a Nintaijutsu. As for the restrictions and additional effects you are confusing this with a technique. This is a fighting style. Read my submission and mathias to get an idea of what or how to do it.
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    (Hiryū geijutsu)Fire Dragon Arts
    Type:Nintaijutsu
    Background:The fire dragon arts where made by the a member of the Uchiha clan known as Ian Uchiha.Its is the mix of Tai-Jutsu with the Katon Element turn the fists and legs of the user on fire.The Users of this style are able to manipulate the flames and and send small fireballs with use head seals.This style was made to be the Uchiha clan version of the Hyuga clan Gentle Fist.But the the Uchiha developed a more deadly type of style being able to mix there Taijustu and Katon Relese.
    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:The inner works of the style is sending katon chakra to the legs and fists of the user so he can manipulate the flames and add more power.The user is basically using normal Taijutsu but also mixing in there Katon chakra to add more fierce force to the blow.Here is a diagram for a better look:
    Additional effects and Restrictions: *
    -Masters of the Fire Dragon Arts are able to create fire from the sun"s heat.
    -Bio must be at least Jounin Rank to learn this style
    -Must have started Katon trainning
    -Beginners will take damage from the trainning due to the harsh training

    Sorry I messed up the post iPod deleted the proper coding


    ±± Declined ±± Fire from the sun heat? Uh!? O_o also, you need to refine this. You talk about beginners yet you don't define them. Tweek this a bit more.
     
         
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    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist

    Type: Taijutsu
    Background:The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    -Paralysation in the surronding area.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.

    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist
    ~Because of the rigid jerky like motions, and the roundabout manner that Mantis Fist users use, the Mantis Fist and its techniques cannot be predicted by 2T Sharingan and lower, with some of the more draining Mantis fist jutsu being unpredictable even by 3T.(Will be noted underneath Mantis Fist Jutsu)
    ~Mantis Fist users are also exceptionally Agile.


    ±± Declined ±± First thing the back ground isn't the background but rather how the style works. So you need to come up with a background and pass all of that into the description of the abilities of the style. The sharingan part is overpowered. That would mean no one could defend or react against a move of that style. Take that out. Also the part about reflexes and speed needs to be translated into short topics that every Mantis Fist will be able to have
     
         
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    Quote Originally Posted by -Scaze- View Post
    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist

    Type: Taijutsu
    Background:The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    -Paralysation in the surronding area.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.

    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist
    ~Because of the rigid jerky like motions, and the roundabout manner that Mantis Fist users use, the Mantis Fist and its techniques cannot be predicted by 2T Sharingan and lower, with some of the more draining Mantis fist jutsu being unpredictable even by 3T.(Will be noted underneath Mantis Fist Jutsu)
    ~Mantis Fist users are also exceptionally Agile.


    ±± Declined ±± First thing the back ground isn't the background but rather how the style works. So you need to come up with a background and pass all of that into the description of the abilities of the style. The sharingan part is overpowered. That would mean no one could defend or react against a move of that style. Take that out. Also the part about reflexes and speed needs to be translated into short topics that every Mantis Fist will be able to have

    Type: Taijutsu
    Background:The mantis fist is a Nintaijutsu style that was devloped after observing the Preying Mantis and he way it moves, and then mimicking its movements and speeds through intense training and practice. Chakra is then used to augement the pin point strikes which on their own would only be slightly more effective than strong fist.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    -Paralysation in the surronding area.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.



    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.

    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist
    ~Mantis Fist users are also exceptionally Agile.


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    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist

    Type: Taijutsu
    Background:The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    -Paralysation in the surronding area.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.

    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist
    ~Because of the rigid jerky like motions, and the roundabout manner that Mantis Fist users use, the Mantis Fist and its techniques cannot be predicted by 2T Sharingan and lower, with some of the more draining Mantis fist jutsu being unpredictable even by 3T.(Will be noted underneath Mantis Fist Jutsu)
    ~Mantis Fist users are also exceptionally Agile.


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    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist

    Type: Nin-Taijutsu
    Background: The Mantis fist was developed long ago by a man who constantly found that in fights his movements were to easy to read, and became predictable and easy to dodge since he often swung too wide or in a pattern, also he found that upon dodging he would often lose his footing or simply leave himself open for a quick follow up due to the fact that his movements were not controlled enough, they were to bodaucious, too outgoing, they were overeactions. After learning this and trying to learn from several great teachers whom he all failed, the man turned to nature, hoping that it would provide the answers he needed. Indeed it did, the man soon came across a Mantis, and upon seeing its rigid jerky movements, movements that were precise and were always in for the kill, seeing how controlled and meaningfull each of the Mantis's movements were, the man started to study the Mantis, mimicking its movements. This birthed a new Taijutsu, the Mantis fist, however it still was not complete, although it granted the user the means of great physical control being able to dodge attacks taking the easiest least time consuming route possible, and only making the movements that were absolutely needed leaving very little room for openings and allowing quick controlled yet rigd and inhumane like conterstrikes that were so bizzare that it usually forced for the opponent to block through the use of reactions or dodge through the use of instinct rather than dodging by predicting the path of trajectory and also the fact that its prowess was equal to that of a punch if not greater, but due to the force being applied to a smaller area than a punch its effects where more devastating. Eventually after several years of wandering, passing down this way of fighting to many students, he came across a certain teenager, after learning the Mantis Fist, the man was able to identify with it, and soon added the use of chakra to the Mantis Fist, completing the art, or so he thought...

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike the speed of hand movements rivaling that of the gentle fist . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body

    -Paralysation in the surronding area due to muscle contraction, similar to that of chidori Nagashi.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.
    -Burning of Skin.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.

    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist

    The first bolded bit is new as a background.
    The second bolded bit has just been moved from the background to the effects.
    Removed the sharingan part and re-worded some of the ~ Sentences.


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    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist

    Type: Nin-Taijutsu
    Background: The Mantis fist was developed long ago by a man who constantly found that in fights his movements were to easy to read, and became predictable and easy to dodge since he often swung too wide or in a pattern, also he found that upon dodging he would often lose his footing or simply leave himself open for a quick follow up due to the fact that his movements were not controlled enough, they were to bodaucious, too outgoing, they were overeactions. After learning this and trying to learn from several great teachers whom he all failed, the man turned to nature, hoping that it would provide the answers he needed. Indeed it did, the man soon came across a Mantis, and upon seeing its rigid jerky movements, movements that were precise and were always in for the kill, seeing how controlled and meaningfull each of the Mantis's movements were, the man started to study the Mantis, mimicking its movements. This birthed a new Taijutsu, the Mantis fist, however it still was not complete, although it granted the user the means of great physical control being able to dodge attacks taking the easiest least time consuming route possible, and only making the movements that were absolutely needed leaving very little room for openings and allowing quick controlled yet rigd and inhumane like conterstrikes that were so bizzare that it usually forced for the opponent to block through the use of reactions or dodge through the use of instinct rather than dodging by predicting the path of trajectory and also the fact that its prowess was equal to that of a punch if not greater, but due to the force being applied to a smaller area than a punch its effects where more devastating. Eventually after several years of wandering, passing down this way of fighting to many students, he came across a certain teenager, after learning the Mantis Fist, the man was able to identify with it, and soon added the use of chakra to the Mantis Fist, completing the art, or so he thought...

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike the speed of hand movements rivaling that of the gentle fist . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body

    -Paralysation in the surronding area due to muscle contraction, similar to that of chidori Nagashi.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.
    -Burning of Skin.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.

    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist

    The first bolded bit is new as a background.
    The second bolded bit has just been moved from the background to the effects.
    Removed the sharingan part and re-worded some of the ~ Sentences.


    ±± Declined ±± for being banned

    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist

    Type: Nin-Taijutsu
    Background: The Mantis fist was developed long ago by a man who constantly found that in fights his movements were to easy to read, and became predictable and easy to dodge since he often swung too wide or in a pattern, also he found that upon dodging he would often lose his footing or simply leave himself open for a quick follow up due to the fact that his movements were not controlled enough, they were to bodaucious, too outgoing, they were overeactions. After learning this and trying to learn from several great teachers whom he all failed, the man turned to nature, hoping that it would provide the answers he needed. Indeed it did, the man soon came across a Mantis, and upon seeing its rigid jerky movements, movements that were precise and were always in for the kill, seeing how controlled and meaningfull each of the Mantis's movements were, the man started to study the Mantis, mimicking its movements. This birthed a new Taijutsu, the Mantis fist, however it still was not complete, although it granted the user the means of great physical control being able to dodge attacks taking the easiest least time consuming route possible, and only making the movements that were absolutely needed leaving very little room for openings and allowing quick controlled yet rigd and inhumane like conterstrikes that were so bizzare that it usually forced for the opponent to block through the use of reactions or dodge through the use of instinct rather than dodging by predicting the path of trajectory and also the fact that its prowess was equal to that of a punch if not greater, but due to the force being applied to a smaller area than a punch its effects where more devastating. Eventually after several years of wandering, passing down this way of fighting to many students, he came across a certain teenager, after learning the Mantis Fist, the man was able to identify with it, and soon added the use of chakra to the Mantis Fist, completing the art, or so he thought...

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike the speed of hand movements rivaling that of the gentle fist . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body
    -Paralysation in the surronding area due to muscle contraction, similar to that of chidori Nagashi.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.
    -Burning of Skin.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.


    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist

    The first bolded bit is new as a background.
    The second bolded bit has just been moved from the background to the effects.
    Removed the sharingan part and re-worded some of the ~ Sentences.


    ±± Declined ±± You need to wait 15 days between the checking and the resubmission. This means you can only resubmit this 15 days from today...
     
         
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    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist

    Type: Nin-Taijutsu
    Background: The Mantis fist was developed long ago by a man who constantly found that in fights his movements were to easy to read, and became predictable and easy to dodge since he often swung too wide or in a pattern, also he found that upon dodging he would often lose his footing or simply leave himself open for a quick follow up due to the fact that his movements were not controlled enough, they were to bodaucious, too outgoing, they were overeactions. After learning this and trying to learn from several great teachers whom he all failed, the man turned to nature, hoping that it would provide the answers he needed. Indeed it did, the man soon came across a Mantis, and upon seeing its rigid jerky movements, movements that were precise and were always in for the kill, seeing how controlled and meaningfull each of the Mantis's movements were, the man started to study the Mantis, mimicking its movements. This birthed a new Taijutsu, the Mantis fist, however it still was not complete, although it granted the user the means of great physical control being able to dodge attacks taking the easiest least time consuming route possible, and only making the movements that were absolutely needed leaving very little room for openings and allowing quick controlled yet rigd and inhumane like conterstrikes that were so bizzare that it usually forced for the opponent to block through the use of reactions or dodge through the use of instinct rather than dodging by predicting the path of trajectory and also the fact that its prowess was equal to that of a punch if not greater, but due to the force being applied to a smaller area than a punch its effects where more devastating. Eventually after several years of wandering, passing down this way of fighting to many students, he came across a certain teenager, after learning the Mantis Fist, the man was able to identify with it, and soon added the use of chakra to the Mantis Fist, completing the art, or so he thought...

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike the speed of hand movements rivaling that of the gentle fist . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body
    -Paralysation in the surronding area due to muscle contraction, similar to that of chidori Nagashi.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.
    -Burning of Skin.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.


    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist

    The first bolded bit is new as a background.
    The second bolded bit has just been moved from the background to the effects.
    Removed the sharingan part and re-worded some of the ~ Sentences.


    ±± Declined ±± You need to wait 15 days between the checking and the resubmission. This means you can only resubmit this 15 days from today...

    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist


    Type: Nin-Taijutsu
    Background: The Mantis fist was developed long ago by a man who constantly found that in fights his movements were to easy to read, and became predictable and easy to dodge since he often swung too wide or in a pattern, also he found that upon dodging he would often lose his footing or simply leave himself open for a quick follow up due to the fact that his movements were not controlled enough, they were to bodaucious, too outgoing, they were overeactions. After learning this and trying to learn from several great teachers whom he all failed, the man turned to nature, hoping that it would provide the answers he needed. Indeed it did, the man soon came across a Mantis, and upon seeing its rigid jerky movements, movements that were precise and were always in for the kill, seeing how controlled and meaningfull each of the Mantis's movements were, the man started to study the Mantis, mimicking its movements. This birthed a new Taijutsu, the Mantis fist, however it still was not complete, although it granted the user the means of great physical control being able to dodge attacks taking the easiest least time consuming route possible, and only making the movements that were absolutely needed leaving very little room for openings and allowing quick controlled yet rigd and inhumane like conterstrikes that were so bizzare that it usually forced for the opponent to block through the use of reactions or dodge through the use of instinct rather than dodging by predicting the path of trajectory and also the fact that its prowess was equal to that of a punch if not greater, but due to the force being applied to a smaller area than a punch its effects where more devastating. Eventually after several years of wandering, passing down this way of fighting to many students, he came across a certain teenager, after learning the Mantis Fist, the man was able to identify with it, and soon added the use of chakra to the Mantis Fist, completing the art, or so he thought...

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike the speed of hand movements rivaling that of the gentle fist . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body
    -Paralysation in the surronding area due to muscle contraction, similar to that of chidori Nagashi.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.
    -Burning of Skin.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.


    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist


    The first bolded bit is new as a background.
    The second bolded bit has just been moved from the background to the effects.
    Removed the sharingan part and re-worded some of the ~ Sentences.


    ±± Declined ±±Very close to approval but i need you to resume this a bit. Its to big and confusing. Keep it simpler please. Also, the lightning part, be sure that its effects have nothing to do with the 3rd Raikage's moves, otherwise you know what happens to this style.
     
         
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    Genkoutsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist


    Type: Nin-Taijutsu
    Background: The Mantis fist was developed long ago by a man who constantly found that in fights his movements were to easy to read, and became predictable and easy to dodge since he often swung too wide or in a pattern, also he found that upon dodging he would often lose his footing or simply leave himself open for a quick follow up due to the fact that his movements were not controlled enough, they were to bodaucious, too outgoing, they were overeactions. After learning this and trying to learn from several great teachers whom he all failed, the man turned to nature, hoping that it would provide the answers he needed. Indeed it did, the man soon came across a Mantis, and upon seeing its rigid jerky movements, movements that were precise and were always in for the kill, seeing how controlled and meaningfull each of the Mantis's movements were, the man started to study the Mantis, mimicking its movements. This birthed a new Taijutsu, the Mantis fist, however it still was not complete, although it granted the user the means of great physical control being able to dodge attacks taking the easiest least time consuming route possible, and only making the movements that were absolutely needed leaving very little room for openings and allowing quick controlled yet rigd and inhumane like conterstrikes that were so bizzare that it usually forced for the opponent to block through the use of reactions or dodge through the use of instinct rather than dodging by predicting the path of trajectory and also the fact that its prowess was equal to that of a punch if not greater, but due to the force being applied to a smaller area than a punch its effects where more devastating. Eventually after several years of wandering, passing down this way of fighting to many students, he came across a certain teenager, after learning the Mantis Fist, the man was able to identify with it, and soon added the use of chakra to the Mantis Fist, completing the art, or so he thought...

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:
    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike the speed of hand movements rivaling that of the gentle fist . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects.
    By using fire chakra the user can heat water present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body
    -Paralysation in the surronding area due to muscle contraction, similar to that of chidori Nagashi.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body via a strongfist follow up without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)
    -Heating and evapouration of water sources.
    -Burning of Skin.



    Additional effects and Restrictions: The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area but becoming less potent as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overeact and make unecesary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely effecient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.


    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benifit from the full offense of the mantis fist.
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist


    The first bolded bit is new as a background.
    The second bolded bit has just been moved from the background to the effects.
    Removed the sharingan part and re-worded some of the ~ Sentences.


    ±± Declined ±±Very close to approval but i need you to resume this a bit. Its to big and confusing. Keep it simpler please. Also, the lightning part, be sure that its effects have nothing to do with the 3rd Raikage's moves, otherwise you know what happens to this style.

    Genkotsu Kamakiri | The Mantis Fist

    Type: Nin-Taijutsu
    Background: The Mantis fist was developed long ago by a man who constantly found that in fights his movements were too easy to read, and became predictable and easy to dodge since he often swung too wide or in a pattern, also he found that upon dodging he would often lose his footing or simply leave himself open for a quick follow up due to the fact that his movements were not controlled enough, they were to bodacious, too outgoing, they were overreactions. After learning this and trying to learn from several great teachers whom he all failed, the man turned to nature, hoping that it would provide the answers he needed. Indeed it did, the man soon came across a Mantis, and upon seeing its rigid jerky movements, movements that were precise and were always in for the kill. Seeing how controlled and meaningful each of the Mantises movements were, the man started to study the Mantis, mimicking its movements. This birthed a new Taijutsu, the Mantis fist, however it still was not complete, although it granted the user the means of great physical control, being able to dodge attacks taking the easiest least time consuming route possible. Only making the movements that were absolutely needed, leaving very little room for openings and allowing quick controlled yet rigid and inhumane like counterstrikes, that were so bizarre that it usually forced for the opponent to block through the use of reactions or dodge through the use of instinct rather than dodging by predicting the path of trajectory. Also the fact that its prowess was equal to that of a adept strong fist punch if not greater, but due to the force being applied to a smaller area than a punch its effects were more devastating. Eventually after several years of wandering, passing down this way of fighting to many students, he came across a certain teenager, after learning the Mantis Fist, the man was able to identify with it, and soon added the use of chakra to the Mantis Fist, completing the art, or so he thought...

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:

    The Mantis Fist is a taijutsu style that involves the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succession and specific places alternating between hands for each strike, the speed of hand movements rivaling that of the gentle fist . While striking the enemy, the user focuses a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers, when they strike the enemy they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemy's body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the fingertips, its effects are devastating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards, this ripple effect does not require contact to be successful, as the ripple of chakra is able to travel up to 5 inches forward through mediums of air, water or earth. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches for every one inch away from the source, becoming wider and less potent as it reaches away from the original release point. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by targeting certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.

    When a raiton chakra charge is used, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause various effects which include, paralysation in the surrounding area due to forced muscle contraction (The same way Nagashi works), and loss of feeling and pain the the affected area due to the raiton chakra charges countering the opponents sensory neuron static charges, this proves disadvantageous to the enemy as they will be oblivious to any damage done upon the affected area.
    When a Katon chakra charge is used, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, heating and evaporating water, and causing the burning of the affected area. This is done by heating water present in bodies or the atmosphere and proves effective due to the body being made up of large sums of water.





    Additional effects and Restrictions:

    -The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usually unprecedented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.
    -Due to the Mantis Fist involving mimicking the actual movements of a Mantis, a Mantis Fist User moves unlike any mammal with extreme precision and speed, and unlike that of a average human a mantis fist users reactions are not fueled by fear or instinct leading them to overreact and make unnecessary movements but the mantis style involves the slightest movements so as to avoid things and thus avoid unnecessary reflexes making Mantis Fist users extremely efficient at dodging, and giving them room for a swift counterattack.
    -This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succession,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid rigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justus
    ~Precise chakra control is needed to benefit from the full offense of the mantis fist. (Sannin Rank or Above)
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijutsu/strong fist and started Raiton and Fire training
    ~Someone who has learned the foundation of The Mantis Fist (Basically this description thingy), is capable of preforming free-form Mantis fist, the effects however are much weaker being able to only evaporate all of the water within a water balloon the size of a lychee berry, while its electrical effect can only damage a area the size of a kiwi fruit. The chakra ripple is also 1/3 of the normal size.
    (If this last bolded bit makes it unprovable please by all means remove it.)

    -I rewrote a lot of things to try and condense it and make it more user friendly.
    -It wasn’t my intention to mimic the Raikage in any way or form, its not what I want the Mantis arts to be. (Just clarifying)
    I'm hoping these are the changes that you wanted o_o

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    Give me some example techniques as its now required. I have a doubt you can make techniques for the raiton part that don't collide with the 3rd raikages technique or that its somehow different enough from Gentle fist. You need to find a way to explain not only how its similar but also how its different. It somewhat grey in that area. Also, the ripple effect is somewhat similar to other approved taijutsu techniques and CFS. Perhaps a different description of the same effect may wield the same results.
     
         
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    キックボクシング Kikkubokushingu| Kick boxing


    Type: Taijutsu
    Background:Kickboxing (in Japanese キックボクシング kikkubokushingu) refers to a group of martial arts and stand-up combat sports based on kicking and punching, historically developed from karate, Muay Thai and western boxing. Kickboxing is often practiced for self-defense, general fitness, or as a contact sport
    Description*on*the*Abilities*and*Inner*Workings*of *the*Style: Kick boxing is the style of the heavy fist where the user of this style delivers powerful and precise fist
    Punches,jabs,hooks, and many more

    to his opponent this is related to the upper body strength (arms) hence the name boxing and the other part of this style is the kicking related part that focus mostly on the users lower body (feet) strength and most attacks of the lower body are related to kicking and variations hence the name kick. To sum up both there is where the name Kick boxing originates from.
    Additional*effects*and*Restrictions:*

    - A master kick boxer's taijutsu strength and speed increase drastically (+35 to speed and + 30 to strength)
    -This should be placed on the users biography to be effective
    -kick boxing style users have great Chakra control and reserves of chakra.
    -Needs to be trained by a master (me till now) so can use this style of fighting.


    ±± Declined ±± First you need to develop this a bit more. The part about speed and strength is to take out completely. The references to these should be in relation to a normal Strong Fist master and never in terms of levels or taking the speed chart as a reference. Also, why would a brute style like this give you great chakra and chakra reserves?
     
         
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    Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū (飛天御剣流 Flying Heaven Honorable Sword Style)
    Type:Kenjutsu
    Background:Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū (飛天御剣流 Flying Heaven Honorable Sword Style) is an ancient kenjutsu style from the Sengoku Jidai developed to allow a single samurai to defeat numerous foes single-handedly. Practitioners of this style use a combination of near-superhuman speed and agility (known as Shinsoku, or godspeed), battōjutsu and an acquired, observation-based pseudo-clairvoyance in order to avoid the attacks of their opponents by the least possible margin and with the least possible effort in order to place themselves in the perfect position to strike in the very instant the opponent's strike misses and stresses two-step attacks in order to ensure that any and all who oppose it are thoroughly slain.

    Due to its tremendous power and speed, Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū has recently been nicknamed "The Black Ship of the Land" in that it would secure absolute victory for whichever side wielded it in a conflict.

    Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū is known by very few people in history due to the fact that it has only passed on from master to apprentice for fourteen generations, with each apprentice taking the life and special mantle of his master as well as the name Hiko Seijūrō. Additionally, the immense force and energy required to perform many of the Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū's moves take a cumulative toll on the body of the user. With sufficient physical strength training and limited combat, the effects can be staunched, but will inevitably render the user incapable of wielding the style's tremendous power.
    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:The user of this style uses there inner chakra and channels it to there feet and hands enabling them to travel at faster than Normal shinobi can.It also requires deep amount of concentration in order to use the abilities of the style*
    Additional effects and Restrictions: *
    -Can only be taught by XxFallenUchiha
    -Based on the speed charts the higher the user the rank the harder to hit the user due to there enhanced Agility
    -User must be in possession of a katana.
    -The masters of this style can manipulate the wind and use there chakra to jump to higher heights


    ±± Declined ±± Bolded part needs much explanation. The description of the abilities and inner workings is basically the description of something any ninja can do. Also, the part about wind needs to be explained. No references to the speed chart.

    ~ This style is already taken
     
         
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    (Seiyuuki Gigei)-Monkey Arts
    Type: Seitaijutsu
    Background: Monkey's aversion to physical effort and activity (mostly fueled by their passive aggressiveness, their highly flexible movement and mostly their playful behavior) leads them to become quite skilled seitaijutsu fighters, relying a lot on their affinity to taijutsu and Earth Ninjutsu. So, by taking advantage of their inherent affinity with Taijutsu and unique form of movement, they developed a new type of Taijutsu unique to them: Monkey Arts.

    Description on the abilities and inner workings of the style:
    The special form og Taijutsu relies on their strong, flexible and rapid movements to hit the opponent, using their flexibility and chakra to strike the opponent specific parts on their body, to disturb their chakra flow and also disturb the five senses of a person, effectivily putting the enemy under a Seitaijutsu. The Seitaijutsu damage, is a mixture of both physical strikes, and the chakra produced in the enemy's body by the chakra placed in the opponent upon impact. The impact serves as a powerful combat style also sending in chakra to disturb specific parts of an opponents body, such as taking away an opponents eye sight.
    Monkey Art moves are generally flexible and fast but a bit flamboyant, relying on soft rapid strikes that inflict physical damage (if they did high physical damage, to specific points, they would auto-release the opponents senses, giving them their ability of sight back) the speed of the moves is slighty faster than that of normal taijutsu and the stances are very strong and firm instead of soft and fluid. The agility and flexibility is the core of the Monkey Art but, unlike other types of taijutsu, the Monkey Art user moves in a highly unpredictable manner, because of their flexibility.

    Monkey Fist basic stance, there are several other highly developed stances for specific situations

    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    -Mastery of Monkey Art have increased Agility, Reflexes and Flexibility when compared to a highly skilled Fist Master
    -Monkey Art users have great chakra control
    -Monkey Art moves envolve less strength that of a Strong Fist, thus why the Monkey Art master without additional training in other forms, will always have less physical strength than a Strong Fist Master
    -Must be taught by JiraiyaEroSennin to master this form
    -The Monkey Arts put a great strain on the body, because of the way they move and they release their own chakra into an opponent
    -After a short while of using this form, even a master of this form will begin to slow down because of the massive amount of chakra loss and strain on the body.
    -One of the deadliest moves of the Monkey Arts masters is their ability to increase their speed by an immense amount for a short period of time


    ±± Declined ±± Don't copy other peoples styles again please. You copied my style and edited a few (little) words. Next time i'll ban you from this thread.
     
         
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    Ryuuchou Kawazoi Ryuujoukohaku -Flowing River of Fierce Fighting
    Type: Taijutsu
    Background: Developed by the Hozuki clan to combat the taijutsu clans of konohagakure, this style of fighting allows inhuman methods of fighting by combining the hydrification technique with taijutsu training, allowing the users to quickly turn parts of their body to water allowing them to dodge or attack in unique ways. It has been said masters of the Ryuuchou Kawazoi Ryuujoukohaku have battled for weeks without either of them landing a blow or showing signs of fatigue.
    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The user combines the hydrification technique and taijutsu to enhance their blows's by focusing moisture into the main muscles for the attacks, turn joints and muscles into water to allow for unique ways of dodging (turn your spine or knees or neck into water on the inside for bending far beyond a human body. It can also grant the user much more stamina by diluting the acid that builds up in muscles with more water, letting them fight at full tilt for days.
    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    -The user will be very slow to use other elements to fight because of the heavy focus on water and taijutsu.
    -Can't use kaito's tai that utilizes an element other then water the same turn a move from this style is used.
    -Requires training by Professor Sarutobi to use.
    -Can only be used by Hozuki Clansmen who have mastered Water Release and Taijutsu
    -Masters of this style will be able to use water release in general much quicker as it is a fundamental part of performing Flowing River of Fierce Fighting techniques.
    -Users can push their bodies to their limits constantly with help from the stamina increasing ability letting them train for days at a time, with this training regime the users can perform normal taijutsu and Kenjutsu with more speed and power.


    ±± Declined ±± From what we've see with the hydration technique, it boosts physical strength and not speed. The user increases their muscle size through the unique ability they have of changing their body to water, reshaping it and increasing it in size by inserting more water and water chakra within the muscles. However, your description of its workings is a bit off. The part about transforming the bones into water to gain flexibility and such isn't correct. Make this style have great strength and stamina as well and endurance to pain and physical blows above average with below average or average speed (all of these when compared with a normal Strong Fist Master).
     
         
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    Quote Originally Posted by Professor Sarutobi View Post
    Ryuuchou Kawazoi Ryuujoukohaku -Flowing River of Fierce Fighting
    Type: Taijutsu
    Background: Developed by the Hozuki clan to combat the taijutsu clans of konohagakure, this style of fighting allows inhuman methods of fighting by combining the hydrification technique with taijutsu training, allowing the users to quickly turn parts of their body to water allowing them to dodge or attack in unique ways. It has been said masters of the Ryuuchou Kawazoi Ryuujoukohaku have battled for weeks without either of them landing a blow or showing signs of fatigue.
    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The user combines the hydrification technique and taijutsu to enhance their blows's by focusing moisture into the main muscles for the attacks, turn joints and muscles into water to allow for unique ways of dodging (turn your spine or knees or neck into water on the inside for bending far beyond a human body. It can also grant the user much more stamina by diluting the acid that builds up in muscles with more water, letting them fight at full tilt for days.
    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    -The user will be very slow to use other elements to fight because of the heavy focus on water and taijutsu.
    -Can't use kaito's tai that utilizes an element other then water the same turn a move from this style is used.
    -Requires training by Professor Sarutobi to use.
    -Can only be used by Hozuki Clansmen who have mastered Water Release and Taijutsu
    -Masters of this style will be able to use water release in general much quicker as it is a fundamental part of performing Flowing River of Fierce Fighting techniques.
    -Users can push their bodies to their limits constantly with help from the stamina increasing ability letting them train for days at a time, with this training regime the users can perform normal taijutsu and Kenjutsu with more speed and power.


    ±± Declined ±± From what we've see with the hydration technique, it boosts physical strength and not speed. The user increases their muscle size through the unique ability they have of changing their body to water, reshaping it and increasing it in size by inserting more water and water chakra within the muscles. However, your description of its workings is a bit off. The part about transforming the bones into water to gain flexibility and such isn't correct. Make this style have great strength and stamina as well and endurance to pain and physical blows above average with below average or average speed (all of these when compared with a normal Strong Fist Master).


    Ryuuchou Kawazoi Ryuujoukohaku -Flowing River of Fierce Fighting
    Type: Taijutsu
    Background: Developed by the Hozuki clan to combat the taijutsu clans of konohagakure, this style of fighting is based on the combining of the hydrification technique with taijutsu training. It has been said masters of the Ryuuchou Kawazoi Ryuujoukohaku have battled for weeks without either of them giving in or showing signs of fatigue.
    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: The user combines the hydrification technique and taijutsu to enhance their blows's by focusing moisture and water chakra into the main muscles for the attacks, enlarging the muscles allows for a boost in natural stamina as well as a higher tolerance to pain. It can also grant the user additional stamina by diluting the acid that builds up in muscles with more water, letting them fight at full tilt for days.
    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    -The user will be very slow to use other elements to fight because of the heavy focus on water and taijutsu.
    -Can't use kaito's tai that utilizes an element other then water the same turn a move from this style is used.
    -Requires training by Professor Sarutobi to use.
    -Can only be used by Hozuki Clansmen who have mastered Water Release and Taijutsu
    -Masters of this style will be able to use water release in general much quicker as it is a fundamental part of performing Flowing River of Fierce Fighting techniques.
    -Users can push their bodies to their limits constantly with help from the stamina increasing ability letting them train for days at a time, with this training regime the user gains great strength and stamina as well as endurance to pain and physical blows above average to that of Strong Fist masters.
    - The user only has average speed when compared with a normal Strong Fist Master despite their increase in physical strength.
    -The master of this style has an above average tolerance to pain.
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    Professor Sarutobi, our loyal member, gave on the 13th of March 2012 a request for a Patent on custom fighting style (Ryuuchou Kawazoi Ryuujoukohaku) Flowing River of Fierce Fighting. I, Scorps of the Custom Fighting Style Bureau, by the power invested in me by Nexus, after reading the submission, have decided that the submitted style satisfies all requirements, and am therefore giving him rightfully earned patent on this style by the following;


    Ryuuchou Kawazoi Ryuujoukohaku | Flowing River of Fierce Fighting
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    Copyright 2012, Professor Sarutobi, NarutoBase.net


    Note: Because of the special abilities of the Hozuki Clan, this doesn't stop other members from submitting close combat Hozuki techniques as long as they don't clash with yours.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Fighting Styles Submission±±

    Kijuuki Kata | Crane Form
    Type: Kenjutsu
    Background: Developed by one of the new generation Samurais on his travels,while studying the use of extra swords and witnessing the shear power of three sword techniques he was able to create the four sword techniques which allow the user to attack the enemy at all enemy pressuring them into mistakes allowing them to give vital hits.Its based of a Cranes ability to stand on one leg while still maintain full mobility and balance.
    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style: Crane Form is a unique Kenjutsu stance in which the user utilizes 4 swords at the same time ; one in each hand, one in his mouth and finally one in the crevice between his leg and thigh.This causes the user to clench the sword,only standing on one foot giving him the look of a crane.This style has been compared to Killer B's Seven Swords Dance.While based off this style,Crane Form focus's much more on control and creating openings by attack the enemy on every level of height.To best utilize the styles potential, the user performs spins and jumps at high speed.The swords can be charged with Chakra to increase their cutting and attack power.The style is incredibly effective at taking down multiple enemy's at the same time.
    Description: The user enters 'Crane Form', a unique Kenjutsu stance in which the user utilizes 4 swords at the same time ; one in each hand, one in his mouth and finally one in the crevice between his leg and thigh.This causes the user to clench the sword,only standing on one foot giving him the look of a crane.This style has been compared to Killer B's Seven Swords Dance.While based off this style,Crane Form focus's much more on control and creating openings by attack the enemy on every level of height.To best utilize the styles potential, the user performs spins and jumps at high speed.The swords can be charged with Chakra to increase their cutting and attack power.
    Additional effects and Restrictions:
    - The user cannot use any other techniques apart from Kenjutsu based attacks
    -Can't use any element based attacks
    -Requires training by Drench to even use and mastery to be able to specialize
    -Can only be used by Samurais
    -Users push their muscle and acrobatic ability's to max when learning this, resulting in being able to be more flexible and move/react quicker overall.

    ±± Declined ±± This is simply a multi sword style. and multi sword styles exist already. Also, your restrictions are those of a technique in itself, not a style.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Fighting Styles Submission±±

    Hachidori no Tsubasa no Ken | Hummingbird Wing Fist

    Type: Nintaijutsu (because of Raiton usage)

    Background:

    This taijutsu style was developed after Selendrile studied the beat patterns of a Hummingbird's wings. The huge amount of beats per second of their wings inspired Selendrile to create a taijutsu style attempting to utilize the same speed. If a shinobi would be able to master this taijutsu style, he could become increasingly deadly in combat.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:

    Hummingbird Wing Fist is utilized to inflict swift multiple strikes in one fluent striking motion. This taijutsu style uses a closed fist, or any position that increases the surface area of a hit to stimulate bruising and burns. Hummingbird Wing Fist is executed by performing a single main strike, with multiple vibrating hits that are placed at various points around the initial strike. When the practitioner strikes an enemy, the practitioner will rapidly vibrate their limb in order to inflict multiple strikes. However, due to the arduous training required to successfully execute the movements of Hummingbird Wing Fist, the vibrating strikes are not perceived to take any longer than a normal single strike.

    The practitioner of this fighting style is capable of stimulating their Type IIx muscle tissue, the fastest tissue in the human body with moderate surges of raition chakra. This type of tissue combined with raiton chakra allows the practitioner incredibly fast bursts of agility. When delivering contact blows with opponents, stimulating the muscle groups in such a way allows high amounts of friction to take place as the initial strike is made which causes varying degrees of burns and bruising. The practitioner activates these muscles with raiton chakra in order to execute not only fluent agility when executing close range combat, but to deliver undetectable strikes originating from the initial contact of the first blow.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:

    -Only Selendrile, Nagato.. and those we allow may use this style.
    -Requires mastery of normal Taijutsu and Raiton due to the process of utilizing this style.
    -Burns and bruising varies according to the techniques.
    -Mastery of this style allows the user increased reflexes, brute strength, and muscle speed compared to normal taijutsu specialists.
    -The user's muscles fatigue quicker than normal because of this style, limiting the amount of Hummingbird Wing Fist techniques the practitioner can use back-to-back, as in the following turn.

    ±± Declined ±± The aditional effects and restrictions are way to generous. Also, you fail to explain what this vibration you make on your strikes is capable of doing. Also, remember these would actually damage you if used with speed of vibration that others can't perceive it. also, this needs to be defined in a way that makes it impossible to compare with A's Nintaijutsu...which presently isn't happening.
     
         
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    Re: ±±Custom Fighting Styles Submission±±

    Quote Originally Posted by Selendrile View Post
    Hachidori no Tsubasa no Ken | Hummingbird Wing Fist

    Type: Nintaijutsu (because of Raiton usage)

    Background:

    This taijutsu style was developed after Selendrile studied the beat patterns of a Hummingbird's wings. The huge amount of beats per second of their wings inspired Selendrile to create a taijutsu style attempting to utilize the same speed. If a shinobi would be able to master this taijutsu style, he could become increasingly deadly in combat.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:

    Hummingbird Wing Fist is utilized to inflict swift multiple strikes in one fluent striking motion. This taijutsu style uses a closed fist, or any position that increases the surface area of a hit to stimulate bruising and burns. Hummingbird Wing Fist is executed by performing a single main strike, with multiple vibrating hits that are placed at various points around the initial strike. When the practitioner strikes an enemy, the practitioner will rapidly vibrate their limb in order to inflict multiple strikes. However, due to the arduous training required to successfully execute the movements of Hummingbird Wing Fist, the vibrating strikes are not perceived to take any longer than a normal single strike.

    The practitioner of this fighting style is capable of stimulating their Type IIx muscle tissue, the fastest tissue in the human body with moderate surges of raition chakra. This type of tissue combined with raiton chakra allows the practitioner incredibly fast bursts of agility. When delivering contact blows with opponents, stimulating the muscle groups in such a way allows high amounts of friction to take place as the initial strike is made which causes varying degrees of burns and bruising. The practitioner activates these muscles with raiton chakra in order to execute not only fluent agility when executing close range combat, but to deliver undetectable strikes originating from the initial contact of the first blow.

    Additional effects and Restrictions:

    -Only Selendrile, Nagato.. and those we allow may use this style.
    -Requires mastery of normal Taijutsu and Raiton due to the process of utilizing this style.
    -Burns and bruising varies according to the techniques.
    -Mastery of this style allows the user increased reflexes, brute strength, and muscle speed compared to normal taijutsu specialists.
    -The user's muscles fatigue quicker than normal because of this style, limiting the amount of Hummingbird Wing Fist techniques the practitioner can use back-to-back, as in the following turn.

    ±± Declined ±± The aditional effects and restrictions are way to generous. Also, you fail to explain what this vibration you make on your strikes is capable of doing. Also, remember these would actually damage you if used with speed of vibration that others can't perceive it. also, this needs to be defined in a way that makes it impossible to compare with A's Nintaijutsu...which presently isn't happening.
    Hachidori no Tsubasa no Ken | Hummingbird Wing Fist

    Type: Nintaijutsu (because of Raiton usage)

    Background:

    This taijutsu style was developed after Selendrile studied the beat patterns of a Hummingbird's wings. The huge amount of beats per second of their wings inspired Selendrile to create a taijutsu style attempting to utilize the same speed. If a shinobi would be able to master this taijutsu style, he could become increasingly deadly in combat.

    Description on the Abilities and Inner Workings of the Style:

    Hummingbird Wing Fist is utilized to inflict swift multiple strikes in one fluent striking motion. This taijutsu style uses a closed fist, or any position that increases the surface area of a hit to stimulate bruising and burns. Hummingbird Wing Fist is executed by performing a single main strike, with multiple vibrating hits that are placed at various points around the initial strike. When the practitioner strikes an enemy, the practitioner will rapidly vibrate their limb in order to inflict multiple strikes. However, due to the arduous training required to successfully execute the movements of Hummingbird Wing Fist, the vibrating strikes are not perceived to take any longer than a normal single strike without the aid of an advanced Sharingan.

    The practitioner of this fighting style is capable of stimulating their Type IIx muscle tissue, the fastest tissue in the human body with moderate, controlled surges of raiton chakra. This type of tissue combined with raiton chakra allows the practitioner incredibly fast bursts of agility.
    The additional vibrating hits on the enemy due to their speed and use of raiton causes varying degrees of burning and bruising on the opponent's body. When delivering contact blows with opponents, stimulating the muscle groups in such a way allows high amounts of friction to take place as the initial strike is made which causes varying degrees of burns and bruising. The practitioner activates these muscles with raiton chakra in order to execute not only fluent agility when executing close range combat, but to deliver undetectable strikes originating from the initial contact of the first blow.

    Additional Effects and Restrictions:

    -Only Selendrile, Nagato..(Ryoku) and those we allow may use this style.
    -Requires mastery of normal Taijutsu and Raiton due to the process of utilizing this style.
    -Burns and bruising varies according to the techniques.
    -Mastery of this style allows the user increased strength, and muscle speed compared to normal Strong Fist users.
    -The user's muscles fatigue quicker than normal because of this style, restricting the user from using A-rank or above taijutsu techniques on the same turn when Hummingbird Wing Fist is used.
    - The large raiton usage has a large strain on the user's hands, limiting the amount of Hummingbird Wing Fist techniques the practitioner can use back-to-back, as in the following turn.

    Reduced additional effects of this style, while adding in more description. Put a clear effect of what the vibrating effects do, even though it was already in there. If you think it is too repetitive on what it says, feel free to edit. I also dont understand how this is similar to A's nintaijutsu, where his is used externally. This is used internally, therefore the opponent cannot see it, and is only released in short bursts.


    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit
     
         
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