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    New Generation Page 1.

    Prologue: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...47#post5880347

    New Generation


    A New Sensei


    As Yashi Hatake was lying in his bed, the sun was rising in the east, Yashi was met by the sun, shining through his window. He wasn't really awake, he was dizzy and very tired.

    Suddenly he heard his mothers voice from downstairs.

    Mother: "Yashi wake up... It's your first day..."

    Yashi had completely forgot about the meeting at the academy to announce the sensei the different teams should have and your teammates.

    Yashi was about to get up, but he slipped out of bed and his face smashed into the floor. He didn't really fell any pain, he was so excited about the day, that he barely noticed that he even fell out of his bed.
    He ran out into the shower and cleaned himself up. After about five minutes when he came out of the shower, he went back into his room to prepare to go to the academy.

    Yashi is only 7 years old, he is standing 139 cm. in height and he is average built with tan skin and blue eyes with a touch of misty grey and spiky dark brown hair, with jaw-length bangs. His attire consists of a standard Konoha-nin uniform, with two bands each on both of his sleeves, a flak jacket and a forhead protector and sandals.

    Yashi ran downstairs and over to the door, but before he could run off, his mother stopped him in his tracks.

    Mother: "Where do you think your going?"

    Yashi: "Mom... It's the first day.. I don't want to be late..."

    Mother: Your not going anywhere before you had your breakfast"

    Yashi sat down unwillingly to eat his breakfast consisting of a rise bowl with a little meat. He finished eating in a few minutes and he quickly picked up his backpack and ran off before his mother could say anything.

    As Yashi was walking through the streets of Konoha, he saw several shops, card shops, restaurants and much more. He also saw few shinobi of Konoha moving around peacefully, but most of all he noticed a few of his friends walking a little further ahead of him, towards the academy.

    Yashi ran as fast as he could, though he first caught up to them, when they reached the academy, where they didn't have time to talk, because of their teacher was waiting for them, so Yashi and his two friends just exchanged handshakes and then they walked into the classroom.

    Teacher: "alright class, this is what you have all been waiting for.... I will now announce the different teams and you will then be send to other classrooms to meet your sensei..."

    Yashi was so excited, he couldn't wait to spend more time with his friends, training and sparing with eachother.

    After a while, Yashi heard his teacher say his name.

    Teacher: "Team 15.... Yashi... Akira... and...

    Yashi was already excited, though it wasn't his friend, it was one of the most beautiful girls he had ever seen, who had ended up on his team.

    Teacher: "And... Ginjiro..."

    Yashi smashed his head into the table in sadness, he had ended up together with what he though was a dumbass. He seriously couldn't believe it, he really hoped he could get rid of him once and for all, but now he was stuck with him for the rest of his time as a Genin, Chuunin and possibly Jounin.

    Teacher: "Alright everyone, go to your respective rooms, and your sensei will be with you soon..."

    Yashi picked up his backpack and left with Akira, to classroom number 7.

    There Yashi and Akira met Ginjiro, and they all sat down, Ginjiro sat in the window looking out into the sky, Akira was sitting reading a book, while Yashi was nervous about who their new sensei could be.

    Suddenly the door opened with a quick motion, and a tall shinobi walked into the classroom.

    Mante: "Hello my name is Mante... I will be your new sensei" *He just smiled at the students*

    Yashi quickly started to analyse him, his new sensei, was about 196 cm. in height, he has long wavy blond hair, very bright green eyes and strong built. He wears a green shirt with the Konoha symbol in red, long green pants and a pale green jacket with a dark green stripe down the middle. He also wears the Konoha Jounin outfit and a Konoha forhead protector.

    Yashi: "Hello Sensei.... So your a Jounin..."

    Mante: "yes I am... Now I want you all to tell me your names and your dream... I will then explain what we will do..."

    Akira: My name is Akira... umh... my dream is.. umh.. to become a great shinobi.. and show that I can surpass Tsunade...."

    Ginjiro: "My name is Ginjiro... I'm not interested in much other than becoming the strongest shinobi alive..."

    Everyone glared at Ginjiro for a moment, before Mante asked Yashi what his name was, and what his dream is.

    Yashi: "Well my name is Yashi... My dream is to surpass my grandfather... Hatake Kakashi..."

    Mante though to himself... "They are all very young.. they have great goals and a lot of potential... I will see tomorrow, if their up to the challenge..."

    Mante: "Alright everyone... our session is over... I have stuff to do, so we will be meeting at the 7th trainingfield tomorrow morning at 5 in the morning...."

    Yashi: "Sensei!!.... Why are we meeting so early..."

    Mante: Let's just say it's our first mission together..."

    Yashi was about to scream in excitement, but he kept his mouth and after Mante had left, Yashi, Akira and Ginjiro all left the academy to go home.

    Yashi parted with his new teammates to get something to eat, he was supposed to meet his mother and father at Ichiraku Ramen.

    When he arrived, his mother and father met him with a smile, and Yashi jumped into his fathers arms, it had been a while since he had seen him.

    Yashi: "Dad!!! Your home" *Yashi was about to cry in happiness*

    ???: "Hey Son... I'm so glad to be home... how did it go at the academy..."

    Yashi: I became a Genin yesterday... *Yashi showed his headband to his father in pride*

    As Yashi and his parents were sitting and talking together while eating at Ichiraku Ramen, his grandfather was sitting on top of the house on the other side of the street, looking at his grandson.


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    Alright everyone here is the next chapter, I hope you like it :D and i will make more if enough people read it!
     
         
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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Awesome read
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    when will the next chapter be
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Maybe tomorrow or wednesday :D Get more people to read or will stop since i won't feel like i do it for anyone... I want comments...
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Awwww D: every time it ends I wanna read more T_T
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Man I like...
    I like to read some more... then hurry up ERO-Sennin
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Quote Originally Posted by phantomlord22 View Post
    Man I like...
    I like to read some more... then hurry up ERO-Sennin
    Alright let's play this game: The more comments and people who read, the faster i make the next chapter :D
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Great, expecting next chapter.
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Sorry if I am offending you but I just want to ask/correct some things. How can a 7 year old be 176 cm tall? As far as I know that is not possible. Otherwise I thought you fanfiction was allright.
    I also want to tell you some personal advice. It's not really cool that you are kinda holding new chapters hostage for comments. If I have misunderstood something don't hesitate to correct me.
    You fanfiction will also look more professonial if you write you sentances like this:
    "I just became a Genin" Yashi said and touched his headband. Insted of Yashi: I just became a Genin * he touched his headband*
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Quote Originally Posted by Mnemeosyne View Post
    Sorry if I am offending you but I just want to ask/correct some things. How can a 7 year old be 176 cm tall? As far as I know that is not possible. Otherwise I thought you fanfiction was allright.
    I also want to tell you some personal advice. It's not really cool that you are kinda holding new chapters hostage for comments. If I have misunderstood something don't hesitate to correct me.
    You fanfiction will also look more professonial if you write you sentances like this:
    "I just became a Genin" Yashi said and touched his headband. Insted of Yashi: I just became a Genin * he touched his headband*
    Well thanks for the information on how to improve my writting... well i'm not trying to hold anyone hostage, it's just I want more people to read or else i don't feel like my work is appreciated and then i won't feel to continue.... And about him being that tall well ill fix it :D
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Quote Originally Posted by JiraiyaEroSennin View Post
    Well thanks for the information on how to improve my writting... well i'm not trying to hold anyone hostage, it's just I want more people to read or else i don't feel like my work is appreciated and then i won't feel to continue.... And about him being that tall well ill fix it :D
    I also want to thank you for not taking my words the wrong way. I've tried that before and it was not pretty...
    It's not great that you feel that your work is not appreciated but the best thing would be if you write for your own pleasure and not others
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Quote Originally Posted by Mnemeosyne View Post
    I also want to thank you for not taking my words the wrong way. I've tried that before and it was not pretty...
    It's not great that you feel that your work is not appreciated but the best thing would be if you write for your own pleasure and not others
    I love writing... but it's not really that fun when not many people read.... but so far it still looks like im going to continue :D
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    nice
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    very nice
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    Quote Originally Posted by bhawk View Post
    very nice
    It will be out tomorrow the next page..
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    i like it 10/10 keep up the good work
     
         

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    Re: New Generation Page 1.

    i thoroughly enjoyed this chapter!!
     
         

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