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    Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2


    Read also: Chapter 1

    Previously….

    Sakura POV


    5 Years… It had been 5 years since that night…. 5 years since she made that mistake…. 5 years since that mistake cost her – her dearest friend…. Naruto…. Her friend who went through hell and back for her sake… To make and keep her happy… Even at the cost of his own….

    Sighing to her self she thought while gulping another shot of sake burning down her throat. “Why?? Why did it happen?? Everything was fine… I was happy wasn’t I with Naruto?? Then why did I scream his name… His name which I knew would hurt him the most…. Why?? The only reason for that can be….. I’m sorry Naruto…. I’m so sorry…..”Shedding tears of guilt while chugging down another bottle of sake to drown her sorrows…..

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    Flashback – Normal POV

    Gentle fist strikes showered and rained all over her body. Hitting her arms, chest and Legs… Hitting and closing her chakra points as painfully as possible, leaving red blisters all over her body at its awake. The strikes showering over her mercilessly while pushing her into the wall, cracking and shattering pieces of it by the power of the strikes she was receiving. She gasped in pain as she tried to breathe just as the final one just stopping inches over her heart. Lavender eyes glared in hatred into her pained green eyes. “You did what?? Care to repeat what you did to Naruto-kun again??” she screamed at her. Those hands now bunched around her neck now as she was yanked out of the gaping hole in the wall, lifted up into the air and shaken vigorously. “How could you?? How could you do that Naruto-kun?? He loved you… He did everything for you… He left everything for you… He let go of his happiness and future for you… And after all these years you do that?? And totally destroy him?? I thought you finally came to your senses Sakura!!” Sakura was thrown to the other side of the room, cracking the wall and breaking some of her ribs by the impact.

    Shaking with anger she walked towards Sakura, tears pouring down her face “I was finally happy that Naruto was happy even if he wasn’t there with me… I loved him… and I still do... But I stepped aside thinking that you will bring him happiness that I could not… And what have you could have given him… He was always alone… Even when we were in the academy… You know it as well was me Sakura!! He has always been alone. He has been striving for everything he wanted – everything he has now…. Or had… He has always wanted a family… Even more than that he wanted someone to accept him and love him for what he was – no matter what he was…. Or what he contained inside…” Grabbing her by the throat and bringing her to eye level Hinata shouted at her “Do you have any idea what you have done to him?? How much you have hurt him Sakura?? Hurt my Naruto-kun??”

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    Tears now pouring over my bruised and blistered cheek I managed to mutter “Im sor..” before her fist contacted my face – snapping my face back and off my feet by the force of the blow. “That’s enough Hinata!!” I look up to see my master Tsunade of the sanin, the remaining rookie nine, Sai, Yamato and their Jonin senseis looking at me with disgust and hate in their eyes. “Leave her be… She is not worth our time… or our attention” I look down in shame to the floor now covered with blood… Blood that I have coughed up.
    With my tears watering I thought “What was I expecting?? Them to comply and be sorry to me?? To take that I hurt Naruto as nothing?? I knew that they’d react this way…. Why?? Why did I do that to Naruto?? Out of all people… I knew how much he loved me….

    “Rookie 9, all Jonin sensei, Sai and Yamato I want you out there now searching for Naruto right away!! Shizune I want you to find Temari and send a letter through her as well as messenger pigeon to Garra on the double. I want his shinobi out looking for him as well. Send a copy to all the rest of the kages to keep a look-out for Naruto while you are at it. You have you order now GO!!” yelled Tsunade.

    As they scattered to do their bidding, I looked up towards her “Tsunade-shishou I want to join to find Naruto as well… Please this is…” “Yes Sakura THIS is YOUR FAULT!! You screwed up big time!! You hurt Naruto!!” roared Tsunade in anger sending KI at me. “Shishou… Im…” “No Sakura!! You lost the right to call me that today!! From today onwards I’m neither your master, teacher, sensei or whatever else you have in your mind. You will be no longer teaching under me and I will be no longer teaching you anything. I’m you Hokage and that’s all I will ever be to you from now on. You will be calling me from my title from now on. Your special ranks have been now removed from you. You are now just another chunnin level kuniochi that I command. You will be following my commands direct to the dot – if not punishments will be severe.” Tsunade said angrily. “Although I’m tempted as it is to punish you now by sending you for a long interrogation session with Anko and Ibiki – I think you will suffer enough as it will be… Now get out of my office before I do something that YOU will regret!! GET OUT NOW” she screamed shooting kage-level KI towards me.

    Quickly gathering myself up in pain, I hurriedly shambled through the door and down the corridor. I could hear the sound of windows shattering behind me. After limping far enough I collapse against a wall. Finally unable to hold it in I burst out crying for what I have done… Finally breaking down, shivering badly, as guilt and darkness came over me...

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    It has been 5 years since then…. I have lost my master, my friends – what I had in the Rookie nine, my senseis…. I lost those people who watched over me, who cared about me and those who helped me when I was in need… Rumours spread out about me in time… Even villagers are hesitant to receive help from me now… People have lost trust in me after that day… Everyone is hesitant… I have lost what used to be my life… Worst of all I lost Naruto… All because of one stupid mistake….

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    Great chapter. You should become a writer. Can't wait fr Chapter 3.
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

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    Great chapter. You should become a writer. Can't wait fr Chapter 3.
    Thanx Flash Hokage :D
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    I wonder what really happened, you really made Sakura do something evil or something like that
    Can't wait for the next one.
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

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    I wonder what really happened, you really made Sakura do something evil or something like that
    Can't wait for the next one.
    LOLz can't u tell what she did?? Really?? I thought out of all people you'd actually kno what happened :scorps:

    Come on think :D Its so obvious
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by TheGoldFlash View Post
    LOLz can't u tell what she did?? Really?? I thought out of all people you'd actually kno what happened :scorps:

    Come on think :D Its so obvious
    I need a precise details
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    Hmm nice, I liked it. I only hope that you don't flame Sakura too much. Because to be honest, not that she's my fave, but I hate all this hate against her.
    I can't tell for sure what she did, but I am guessing...
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by Chatte View Post
    Hmm nice, I liked it. I only hope that you don't flame Sakura too much. Because to be honest, not that she's my fave, but I hate all this hate against her.
    I can't tell for sure what she did, but I am guessing...
    Hmmm I c. Peeps been askin me abt that too ;D I just didnt wanna go into the details at that scene. But just so u kno there
    will be flashback later on
    Don't worry I dont hate Sakura either. It just needed to b like so to start off - everything will chill down n b clearer later on ok?? Once the
    flashbacks
    r there everything will b easier to understand ;D
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by TheGoldFlash View Post
    Hmmm I c. Peeps been askin me abt that too ;D I just didnt wanna go into the details at that scene. But just so u kno there
    will be flashback later on
    Don't worry I dont hate Sakura either. It just needed to b like so to start off - everything will chill down n b clearer later on ok?? Once the
    flashbacks
    r there everything will b easier to understand ;D
    Well, that's refreshing.
    Can't wait for the next chapter.
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    I love the narration and the different POV, I'm not good at such things and so I give credit where its due. Hinata beating up Sakura is something I'd like to see . +rep.

    Points for improvement-the hate for Sakura is too much, it's out of character, Kakashi or someone would step in to stop the beating, Tsunade won't hate her that much, Hinata won't beat her up, Naruto won't run away cuz of heartbreak. Also its chakra not KI.
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    Awesome, totally like your style, you should became writer!
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

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    Well, that's refreshing.
    Can't wait for the next chapter.
    It will b out on Tuesday night hopefully

    Quote Originally Posted by Uzumaki16 View Post
    I love the narration and the different POV, I'm not good at such things and so I give credit where its due. Hinata beating up Sakura is something I'd like to see . +rep.

    Points for improvement-the hate for Sakura is too much, it's out of character, Kakashi or someone would step in to stop the beating, Tsunade won't hate her that much, Hinata won't beat her up, Naruto won't run away cuz of heartbreak. Also its chakra not KI.
    The reason - no one steps in cause they r in shock - later on tsunade steps in to stop her... As for Naruto runnin off - everyone has a limit of pain they can take till their breaking point where they snap - Naruto reached it. It will become clear why he left later on. There will b
    Flashbacks
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    Quote Originally Posted by Gama View Post
    Awesome, totally like your style, you should became writer!
    Thanx Gama :D I'll think abt it Hehe
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    wow i like how you have done this
     
         

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    wow i like how you have done this
    Thanx man :D
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    I'm truely curious as to what has happened as the severity of the way even Tsunade is treating her is unrealistic in any true sense.

    The role playing in the series where Naruto is the victim and Sasukra is the remoseful villan seems too strongly played but I do like this story regardless.

    As far as your structure, I like it, however you need to break up the paragraphs when different people speak, it's proper grammar and it's easier to understand when on person is talking from another. I sincerly hope that what you've made Sakura out to be is worth all this hostility she's recieving, especially from Tsunade who has been in Sakura's situation in terms of the relationships with teammates.
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by Reborn View Post
    I'm truely curious as to what has happened as the severity of the way even Tsunade is treating her is unrealistic in any true sense.

    The role playing in the series where Naruto is the victim and Sasukra is the remoseful villan seems too strongly played but I do like this story regardless.

    As far as your structure, I like it, however you need to break up the paragraphs when different people speak, it's proper grammar and it's easier to understand when on person is talking from another. I sincerly hope that what you've made Sakura out to be is worth all this hostility she's recieving, especially from Tsunade who has been in Sakura's situation in terms of the relationships with teammates.
    Hey I will keep what you have said in mind. And about Sakura's situation - To as what happened will be revealed in the next few chapters. Its a major event - error on Sakura's part which causes this reaction. The village is distant from Sakura - that is all because what she did effected Naruto......
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 2

    this is a great sequel to chapter 1

    i like it! +rep
     
         

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    this is a great sequel to chapter 1

    i like it! +rep
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