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    Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4


    Read also: Chapter 1, Chapter 2, Chapter 3

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    “Naruto… Why tho? Your friends have been missing you a lot. All who knows you have been asking if there have been any information about you or even any sighting or messages at all. Not to mention two kunoichi under my command comes daily to keep up to date if anything is to come up… Where have you been Naruto??” Tsunade said giving a serious stare. Giving out a chuckle “Baa-chan… I have been here and there you know… Well I have been training a lot, but most of the times I have been traveling in the past years. Sure I have been here – watching over you, but that’s another story to tell later….” Looking away from her he continued “As to why I don’t want to face them yet.. It not that I don’t want to see them. It’s just those two kunoichis… I know its Sakura and Hinata that you were talking about… I… I never want to see one of them….The other…. I wish to see… but I don’t know what to do…..”

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    He looked away as if he was lost in thought and smiles. “Hinata…. She has been always there... I may have not looked like I have known it, but she was always there. She was there watching me – where ever I was. Whether I was training or scuffing down Ramen – it didn’t matter, she was there always. Always watching over me. She is the Angel that watches over me Baa-chan. It is because of her that I am the man I am today – even when hope was lost in the past it was the thought of her that kept me going….. I know you must be wondering why I kept of harassing Sakura for dates and what-not back in the days…. Well to me Sakura, was who I wanted then – she was smart, talented and beautiful and to top it all she was also the first friend that I made…. But we drifted apart in our childhood to the circumstance that now as you know it Baa-chan….. “

    He seemed lost in his story and continued “I kept on chasing her because… well because I thought what we had was what I wanted…. In doing so I overlooked the angel watching over me – took her for granted. I ignored her when she was around me or when I felt her presence. Over the years I forgot that she was there, that her presence was what kept me going…. Forgot that It was what kept me working harder to prove myself not to just me – specifically to her and the world. Forgot that it was her watching over my shoulder that kept me warm and in-company during those lonely and silent nights where I was at my lowest…. And weakest”

    “Then It happened Baa-chan…. My brother in everything but blood – Sasuke left the village….. He left the village with Sakura shattered and crying, begging me to bring him back…. That is when I truly lost myself… Of who meant what to me….. “

    “The lie that I kept telling myself…. that I loved Sakura and wanted Sakura – truly became what I strived for other than bringing my brother home of course…. I went after him on the first chance I got…. And I returned barely clinging to my own life… You know what happened during the years afterward Sakura…. I went training with Ero-sennin…. came back to the village. But all those years, I kept on chasing after Sakura… for her affection and love. I had lost and forgot what and who I had strived for… My Angel…. was left alone and long forgotten….”

    “She reminded me later…. That one time…. During the battle with Pain…. She stepped in to save my life, risking her life in the process…. even when she knew her opponent was much stronger than her…. She reminded me there…. Who she was…. She confessed and she told me….. that….. she loved me…..”
    Looking angry, he gazed at his hands “And Baa-chan…. Do you know what I did?? To Hinata?? After the fight?? I ignored her… The words she spoke… even if I knew they were the truth…. I chose not to believe it… I chose to avoid her as much as possible if I could… Worst of all it is that I CHOSE to do it…..” He slammed his hands – now bunched into a fist on the window sill, shattering the glass by the power of the blow. Looking at her with his now bleeding and bruised hand he shouted “I CHOSE to do it!!! How could I have done that?? Even when I knew what she was telling me was the truth…. I CHOSE to blind myself from it and hurting her in the process??? What kind of man am I??”

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    Alarmed by the outburst, Tsunade moved unconsciously away from him. He picked it up instantly and closed his eyes and started breathe slowly to try and calm himself. After a couple of minutes he opened his eyes to look at me. “Sorry about that Baa-chan…. Let’s take a break shall we?? Would you like some Ramen or some tea?? Im sure I can sneak out or get some if need be…”

    Moving to his side I start healing his hands in silence. His hands we rough, uneven but soft – a hand of a man now – I thought. Looking up at him I finally had to admit this is not the young boy who I met all those years ago. He had grown up, grown through pain and disaster. Not many could have become what he had. Feeling proud of him. I mumble out “No… I want you to keep on going Naruto… By the sounds of it you have been keeping this inside too long…. Let it all out…” He stared at me a while before asking again “You sure Baa-chan?? Because once it is started, it won’t finish until it is finished…”

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Nice one but I'm still narusakura fan
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by bobisacoolguy View Post
    Nice one but I'm still narusakura fan
    z. I respect that man. Its all cool :D
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Pretty good, next one should be Hinata's POV
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by Maina Deah View Post
    Pretty good, next one should be Hinata's POV
    z u never kno
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Cool job
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Very niiice!
    Although, the only thing is that I don't see Naruto going all "My Angel" on Hinata, although he loves her.
    But that's just my opinion. Anyway, I loved it and waiting for the new chapter!
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    whoa naruto went mad i am a Naru/Hina fan nice chapter keep it up i look forward to the next one
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by Chatte View Post
    Very niiice!
    Although, the only thing is that I don't see Naruto going all "My Angel" on Hinata, although he loves her.
    But that's just my opinion. Anyway, I loved it and waiting for the new chapter!
    Quote Originally Posted by serenaandrosie View Post
    whoa naruto went mad i am a Naru/Hina fan nice chapter keep it up i look forward to the next one
    Chatte abt Naruto calling Hinata his "angel" - Angel is a word used for someone who is pure and for a person who watches over you. And it is the part that Hinata has been doing most of her life. It will get cleared later on because there will be
    Flashbacks
    and more
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    . Hehe. Ok ok. Here is a hint it will be based on Hinata's perspective

    Thanx alot guys :D I shall get on to doing next chapter after my exam. Hopefully will post it before end of next week.
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by TheGoldFlash View Post
    Chatte abt Naruto calling Hinata his "angel" - Angel is a word used for someone who is pure and for a person who watches over you. And it is the part that Hinata has been doing most of her life. It will get cleared later on because there will be
    Flashbacks
    and more
    Flashbacks
    . Hehe. Ok ok. Here is a hint it will be based on Hinata's perspective

    Thanx alot guys :D I shall get on to doing next chapter after my exam. Hopefully will post it before end of next week.
    hey no spoilers
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Now Tsunade is acting fearful for mere outbursts? smh.

    You need to work on your grammar and still splitting up the paragraphs when different people talk.

    You are using too many periods (...) as pauses. It doesn't increase the suspence, after a while it's repetative and a little tedious. Working on your use of grammar will help you in the long run.

    Also a more accurate representation of the characters will give this story a stronger, more believable feel to it. I'm a NaruHina but this intensity on the blame you place on sakura has me sympathizing with her. She's remorseful but everybody's turned her back on her. Now, granted we don't know the situation or what she did, but even still I'm a little skeptical as to what she could've done, that could have been so bad to have the entire village hate her.
     
         

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    Re: Love someone stronger than you…. - Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by Maina Deah View Post
    hey no spoilers
    Hey Sorry :?

    Quote Originally Posted by Reborn View Post
    Now Tsunade is acting fearful for mere outbursts? smh.

    You need to work on your grammar and still splitting up the paragraphs when different people talk.

    You are using too many periods (...) as pauses. It doesn't increase the suspence, after a while it's repetative and a little tedious. Working on your use of grammar will help you in the long run.

    Also a more accurate representation of the characters will give this story a stronger, more believable feel to it. I'm a NaruHina but this intensity on the blame you place on sakura has me sympathizing with her. She's remorseful but everybody's turned her back on her. Now, granted we don't know the situation or what she did, but even still I'm a little skeptical as to what she could've done, that could have been so bad to have the entire village hate her.
    I will try and fix the grammar and everything else as you have suggested Reborn. The intensity - the blame and sakura will be
    revealed in the next few chapters. Its a major event - error on Sakura's part which causes this reaction. The village is distant from Sakura - that is all because what she did effected Naruto......


    But to be honest I can see what happens clearly - I guess I haven't clearly stated it out. It will be later on.
     
         

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