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    Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Hello everyone! I apologize for posting yet another chapter after my two previous long chapters yesterday so I think you’ll be happy to know I won’t be posting my next chapter until next week.
    But with the help and guidance from EL MAGNIFICO Sensei and tips from Anando, I’m taking their advice on-board and tryng to shorten my chapters down. I’m also cutting out my long descriptive book type text. I know it’s a change and I found it difficult to adjust to but I hope everyone likes the layout now.
    Also, I’d like to thank serenaandrosie, Aze and everyone else supporting this Fanfic of mine.
    I hope you enjoy Chapter Two and for anyone who hasn’t read Chapter One, Part One and Chapter One, Part Two, here are two links to both of them:
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=198376
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=198451
    Or if it is too long to read, here is a summary of what has happened:
    15 years ago Tenshi, Konoha’s Angel, fell in battle, defeated by Kurama, the Nine Tailed Fox. Hana was a young, quiet and sweet Kunoichi close to this praised and adored Ninja. After the loss of Tenshi, Hana is now, 15 years later, a member of the organisation Akatsuki. Hana is now a soulless, silent and emotionless person. After causing a fight between the Akatsuki members, Pain informs Hana about her next mission, to bring the Jinchuriki of the Nine Tailed Fox, Naruto Uzumaki back to the hideout.
    I apologize for any grammar mistakes and change of layout but I hope everyone likes it. I hope you all enjoy Chapter Two and please feel free to comment and post messages. Thank you in advance.

    ~Chapter Two: Damaged, Dead Demon. ~
    Hana: Where can I find this Naruto Uzumaki?
    Pain: …The Village Hidden In The Leaves. You are to bring the Jinchuriki back here. Do you understand?
    Hana: Sure… I understand… Leader-Sama.
    (Hana slowly turns around to walk out of the hideout, swaying like a crazy drunk and exhausted person while giving her Leader a distraught grin of excitement)
    (Everyone watches Hana in silence, as Tobi finally hits the ground with a crash on top of his favourite Senpai)
    Tobi: Senpai!!
    Deidara: Tobi, damn it! Stop hugging me, this is weird and gross yeah! I prefer you up in the air, not on me umh! Ouch, stop pulling on my hair, it looks years to grow such beautiful hair you moron, !
    (Deidara madly tries to force the leech Tobi off of his back as Kakuzu walks towards an ill-tempered Hidan and puts his hand out)
    Kakuzu: Pay up.
    Hidan: What!?
    Kakuzu: We betted you’d start swearing if someone broke the bathroom door, remember?
    Hidan: You made that up you *****! You ******* ****, you think you can take my ******* money like that!? You stupid son of a ****, you ****** *******!!
    Kakuzu: *sigh* I wish you were mortal so I could just end your life and take my money.
    Hidan: You’re money!? You *****! Stop ******* lying! Get a ****** life, you *****!!!
    (Konan sighs as she heads towards Pain, creeping around a hungry Zetsu trying to consume Kisame in one gulp and Sasori who had walked into the corner of the hall, playing with his puppets)
    Konan: Why don’t they ever listen? They’re grown men…
    Pain: It’s troublesome and embarrassing being the Leader of this insane group of stupid idiots… Thank god the villages can’t see how they really act…
    Konan: *nod* …What happened to Hana? And where is Itachi?
    Pain: I told Hana what her mission was and knowing her, she’s heading of right now and will take down that Jinchuriki without any trouble. And Itachi probably is-

    -Outside of the Akatsuki Hideout-
    ??????: You’re planning on leaving to Konoha right now?
    (Hana turns round at the speed of a snail after being brought back to reality to see Itachi looking at her with no expression)
    Hana: Yes, I am.
    (Itachi walks beside Hana who had been staring at his movements emotionlessly since he spoke)
    Itachi: I’ll be coming with you.
    Hana: …Why? …Did Pain order you to do so?
    Itachi: No. I want to come with you.
    Hana: Why? … Why would you want to come with me? …If it’s because you think I’m weak forget about it. I can protect myself, fool…
    (Itachi stares down at the small woman next to him who had turned away from him to stare at the rocky ground beneath her wearing a melancholic expression)
    (Itachi then remembers why it was she was here in the Akatsuki in the first place)
    Tenshi: Young man! Please take care of this child, she has no one here to look after her.
    Itachi: …I’m looking after you.
    (Hana’s eyes widen at Itachi’s words as she turns around as their eyes meet)
    Hana: Looking… after me?
    (Itachi nods as he starts to walk the path leading towards Konoha)
    Hana: Someone… other than her… is… looking after me? Why…? …Is this… another angel Tenshi was replaced with? No… Tenshi will never be replaced. You’re just… trying to become my Guardian Angel, aren’t you? Idiot. This is your favour to Tenshi… not for me… Nothing’s ever… for me.
    (Hana wonders as she watched the Uchiha’s back grow smaller with every step)
    (Hana begins to catch up to Itachi, with every stumble and sway, he comes into a better view, the one person alive who is looking after her)

    -Outside Konoha’s Gate-
    (Hana stares at the open gate, reminiscing at the times she was once a Ninja here)
    Tenshi: Hana, let’s do some training together!
    (Tenshi teaches Hana how to achieve Chakra Control with Hana quickly succeeding in it with Tenshi carrying Hana on her shoulders, celebrating happily)
    Kakashi: What? You want to play Rock, Paper, Scissors with me?
    (Kakashi and Hana play Rock, Paper, Scissors, with Hana coming out as the winner)
    Guy: What’s this!? Even Hana can beat you Kakashi?! Damn it all!!!
    (Imaginary waves crash on mountains behind Guy as he cries in frustration and defeat as Hana laughs at his display and Kakashi face palms)
    Kurenai: Hana. I’m happy to see you looking so healthy, Tenshi has treated you well. I’m proud of you.
    (A young Hana hugs Kurenai as she pats Hana on her small head, smiling delightfully)

    Hana:
    Itachi: Have you put a Chakra barrier field around us?
    Hana: It’s already activated.
    Itachi: Good. Then let’s go.
    (Hana follows Itachi, turning around every corner in search of the Jinchuriki, Naruto Uzumaki)
    (The very thought of meeting the Nine Tails carrier sends a shiver down Hana’s spine and plasters her face with a disturbing smile)
    (The two Akatsuki members come to an empty bridge in Konoha where they find…)
    ??????: *gasp* You’re-!?

    -Inside the Hokage’s Residence-
    (Tsunade slams her clenched fist into the table with a giant crash, causing the table to split in two)
    Tsunade: The Akatsuki are in the village right now!? How could they have come in without any of us knowing? Call an alarm, and find out exactly which Akatsuki members are here!
    Shizune: Lady Tsunade, it appears the intruders are Itachi Uchiha and Hana.
    Tsunade: What? Hana… she was a Kunoichi from Konoha and if I remember correctly; she was very close to Konoha’s Angel. She was a quiet and kind person… why is she in the Akatsuki?
    Shizune: Lady Tsunade, what should we do?
    Tsunade: …Gather up all the Chunin and Jonin here in Konoha right now! We must force the Akatsuki pair out of here, by any means possible!

    -The Bridge-
    ???: What’s the matter, Sakura?
    Sakura: Sai, Kakashi Sensei... Captain Yamato… look.
    (Sakura, while slightly shaking in fear points towards her to get the attention of Kakashi who has his nose in his book and Yamato who was trying to get a peak)
    ???????: Akatsuki huh? Why have you come here again, Itachi?
    ??????: The Akatsuki!? It's a good think Naruto isn't here then, I hope that's not what they're here for... We have no idea where he is right now and... why were we unable to sense them?
    Itachi: Kakashi Hatake. I was hoping I wouldn’t run into you like last time. We don’t want to cause a panic or a war.
    (Kakashi now notices the small woman standing behind Itachi)
    Kakashi: … *gasp* That woman… can it be? Hana!?
    Yamato: Kakashi, do you know that Kunoichi?
    Hana: …Kakashi Sensei. Let’s spar again, like the good old days. But, where is dear Guy Sensei? I’ve missed you all, so very much... Deactivate!
    (As she makes a hand sign, Hana's overflowing chakra is released as she deactivates the invisible barrier. Hana’s mouth turns into a ghastly smile of Death itself as her hands of darkness haunt the dying air around her)

    Konoha’s Flower is now a Damaged, Dead Demon.

    ~End Chapter Two~

    Thank you very much for reading and posting any comments in advance. I hope you’re enjoying it and please look forward to the next chapter!
     
         

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    Death is natural... and to
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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    someone really hates naruto in this one im not talking about but hana *shivers* evil
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    read the second half of it haha sorry to tired to get through it all but kept me entertained great work and big effort put in!
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Quote Originally Posted by izinagi54 View Post
    someone really hates naruto in this one im not talking about but hana *shivers* evil
    Muhahaha Poor Naruto, he has a secret hater. I hope you enjoyed Chapter Two. :D And thank you very much for reading and posting!

    Quote Originally Posted by skehan17 View Post
    read the second half of it haha sorry to tired to get through it all but kept me entertained great work and big effort put in!
    Hey no problem, my fault for typing so much up. :ghehe:
    But I'm very grateful you read all of Chapter One but please get some rest. Thank you so very much and I'm really happy you were entertained by it. ^_^
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Loved it.they shuld make a môvie
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by Dork View Post
    Loved it.they shuld make a môvie
    Thank you, that's so wonderful to read! D And I'm so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    wow i love it
    This is now one of my fav fanfic's.
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Quote Originally Posted by uzumaki antonia View Post
    wow i love it
    This is now one of my fav fanfic's.
    D Yay! Thank you for reading yet another chapter and posting. And thank you so much, that really means a lot to me! :') I'm so happy you like it. ^_^
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    loved it .....its amazing ...u r too goood actually !!!!!!
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Quote Originally Posted by EL MAGNIFICO View Post
    loved it .....its amazing ...u r too goood actually !!!!!!
    D Arigatou Sensei! No, no, not true. I still have to improve, you are far better than me and many other Fanfiction creators here as well. I hope I'll be at your level one day. :D Thank you for reading, commenting and enjoying it! ^^
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    decent FF Amazed again Thanks alot ^^

    Cant wait for the New Episode:D
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

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    decent FF Amazed again Thanks alot ^^

    Cant wait for the New Episode:D
    D Arigatou Aze! I'm so glad you like it! No, thank you Aze!!
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    very nice keep it up i enjoyed this chapter i look forward to your next one
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Quote Originally Posted by serenaandrosie View Post
    very nice keep it up i enjoyed this chapter i look forward to your next one
    Thank you very much for yet another comment and also looking forward to the next chapter! D I hope you enjoy the rest. ^^
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Great description :D great thoughts. Just great fan fiction !
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Quote Originally Posted by Sonin View Post
    Great description :D great thoughts. Just great fan fiction !
    :'D Thank you Sonin! I'm so happy!! :D Thank you for enjoying it and commenting! ^_^
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    i m glad ...u r getting so many appreciation and ....praise !!
    keep it up !!
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by EL MAGNIFICO View Post
    i m glad ...u r getting so many appreciation and ....praise !!
    keep it up !!
    Thank you EL MAGNIFICO. You're an amazing man, you know! :D I definately will Sensei!
     
         

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    Re: Konoha's Angel And Flower (Chapter 2)

    Sorry Looks like i'm the last one to read that chapter >.<
    Very good chapter, you just made the akatsuki look better :D
    Keep it up
     
         

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