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    Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Deadly Love: Chapter 1

    I go downstairs and put on my favorite black jacket with striped black and white sleeves and walk out of the house. I pull the hood over my head to hind my face and to shield me a bit from the drizzle outside. Normally, I would head to the club and find my dinner there, all drunk and wanting to get into a girl’s pants, but tonight I feel like I want to eat something that can get my mind off my sister. Possibly someone who won’t be missed by anyone if I eat their soul, but I need to talk to someone first. I walk down towards an ally way and head towards a metal door near the end of the ally way. The trash outside the door is overflowing and there are huge puddles of dirty water on the ground, even though it hasn’t rained that hard yet.

    “Hey! Jackie! You there?” I say, knocking on the door. I know she’s there. I can see her in there with my enhanced sight. I can also see an man I’ve never seen before.

    “Who is it?” says Jackie as I “see” her struggling to get the door. She must have had a bit too much to drink tonight.

    “It’s me, Skyler!” I say rolling my eyes a bit. She finally get the door open and invites me in. The boy on the couch is more hammered than Jackie is by the looks of it.

    “What do you want Sky, im in the middle of something right now.” Jackie says looking back at the boy with a smile.

    “Yeah I can see that.” I say sarcastically. I look at her and then drag her off into the kitchen so that the guy doesn’t hear us talking. Better safe than sorry.

    “What do you want?” she asks getting serious.

    “I need food but Im not in the mood to go to club and get food there. I want to find someone who won’t be missed by anyone and hopefully won’t be found by anyone as well.” I say looking into her eyes. She stares at me for a minute and then she smiles. She pulls out an old leather notebook and searches through the addresses until she stops at one address

    “Here you go.” She says handing me the book. “Hope you don’t mind snacking on someone who’s into drugs.” I look at her for a moment and then smile

    “Nope. It’d be a different meal than usual though.” I look back at the boy who is now staring at a lamp like a deer in the headlights and then I look at Jackie.

    “So you not only like them drunk but you like them stupid huh?”

    “Very funny Sky.” She says punching my arm a bit.

    I laugh a bit and then run out the door “Thanks by the way!”

    “No problem” I hear her say as she shuts the door.


    ~ Later ~


    I walk up to the address that Jackie gave me earlier and knock on the door. He’ll probably think that im here to get drugs as a new client or something. A guy answers the door and looks at me weirdly.

    “You don’t look like the type that smokes.” He says with a dull look on his face.

    “I smoke but on rare occasions.” I say crossing my arms. “Mind if I come in?” I say looking at his red shot eyes. He invites me in and as soon as the door shuts behind him, my inner demon starts to go wild. I try to hold it back as he walks past me but it’s too late. As soon as he tries to offer me something, I tackle him to the ground. I can hear his heart race as he tries to get me off of him. My green eyes turn to a golden color and my long brown hair turns a platinum blonde. My skin turns from sun kissed to sterling silver and y teeth sharpen to a point. He panics even more as he sees me transform before his eyes.

    “Please don’t kill me!” the guy says freaking out.

    “Sorry im hungry and you look tasty.” I say to him. Before he can scream, I bite his neck hard. He tries to scream and then before he is silenced, I kiss his lips and my gold eyes glow brightly. I move away from his lips as I see his soul exit from his mouth and enter into mine. It tastes different. It’s not a taste I would have expected from a drug dealer. He has a clean taste to him. No drugs, no alcohol and defiantly not anything bad in his soul. His soul tastes so good that I finish him off before I can get a real good taste of his soul. I transform back into my original form. My jacket’s sleeves are now covered with blood splatters from when I bite his neck.

    “That was delicious.” I say to myself as I walk out of the house without a trace.

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    It took me awhile to write this chapter so i hope it's good.
    Chapter 3 coming soon
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    WTF
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    what?
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Whoa, hello A few grammar errors, but well done Very...peculiar story
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by chakrawizard555 View Post
    Whoa, hello A few grammar errors, but well done Very...peculiar story
    i was tired when i wrote this
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by Sindy View Post
    i was tired when i wrote this
    Hey, I'm tired whenever I feel like writing mine, so don't get too down for that It was very good, I enjoyed it
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by chakrawizard555 View Post
    Hey, I'm tired whenever I feel like writing mine, so don't get too down for that It was very good, I enjoyed it
    did you read the other two though ?
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by Sindy View Post
    did you read the other two though ?
    Sure did The skip to the present put me off a bit, but it worked out just fine The first-person viewpoint was a nice touch, too
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by chakrawizard555 View Post
    Sure did The skip to the present put me off a bit, but it worked out just fine The first-person viewpoint was a nice touch, too
    im more used to the script writing but it was a nice switch up though ^.^ and thank you
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sindy View Post
    im more used to the script writing but it was a nice switch up though ^.^ and thank you
    No prob I kinda have a different writing format altogether, so I'll read anything that looks interesting as long as it's well-written.
     
         
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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    I didn't comment on Chapter 1, nor the Prologue, but I really enjoy this FF so far. ^^ I can't wait to read more.
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Really good I saw a few spelling mistakes thou
     
         

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    Re: Deadly Love Chapter 2

    Quote Originally Posted by Reji View Post
    Really good I saw a few spelling mistakes thou
    where D:
     
         

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