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    The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns 6 [21]

    The Legendary Sage of Konoha Series, Previous Chapters [In Chronological Reading Order]:



    Note: I'm expecting one of two reactions from you guys on one of the choices I made in this chapter regarding Naruto, and it's either going to be "awesome!" or "how on earth could you do that, it ruins everything?!" .
    This is also probably the longest chapter I've ever written and most likely the longest chapter I'll ever write... You've been warned.

    The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns, Chapter 6;
    The Super Nova Element?!:


    Tsunade: It... can't be??

    Sakura: Sasuke! Sasuke, you need to get up!

    Kurotsuchi: Sasuke!!

    Onoki: You need to get up now!

    Realizing the danger Naruto and Sasuke now were in, Sakura and the rest tried to call out to Sasuke, to get his attention, but to no vain as they didn't get any response from him.

    Sakura: Has he... passed out?!

    Onoki: This is bad! Naruto! You need to deal with the Jubi fast, before it grows into it's full size and before it regains its full power!

    Naruto: !!... I... But how?! How do you suppose I deal with this?!

    Onoki: You need to seal it inside yourself, it's our only hope!

    Tsunade: But you saw what happened to Tobi, there is no guarantee that it will work! Besides, it's too risky!

    Onoki: There is no other way to stop the Jubi!

    Naruto (In Thoughts): This is bad... this is very bad!... I need to deal with him fast, while he's still in his semi-grown state and while I still have some chakra left... I might have to use that jutsu!

    Naruto slammed his hands together as he began charging up chakra. After a few seconds, his Bijou mode turned on as he then preformed some quick hand seals and leaped off at great speed, racing down the wall of the barrier. In an instant, he had appeared on the right side of the Jubi as he jumped up in the air above him. Gigantic chakra-chains began leaking out off the seal on his stomach as he landed on the left side of the Jubi and onto the wall of the barrier again, high up into the air. They slammed down towards the ground in three different directions - one on the right, one on the left and one on the back side of the Jubi, forcing it down. He then jumped down from the barrier-wall and landed in front of the Jubi as a final chain stuck to the ground where he landed. The chains began compressing the Jubi to its knees as Naruto quickly formed some new hand seal.

    Naruto (In thoughts): I can still make it! Just a little more! This needs to work, it just has to!

    The chains began dragging the Jubi towards Naruto as they retracted inside his seal.

    Naruto (In thoughts): If I can only drag it inside my seal and then close it, it will all be over!

    Struggling to drag the mighty creature towards him, Naruto suddenly noticed the power of the Jubi began increasing as the Jubi grabbed onto the chain with its hands as it stamped its feet towards the ground.

    Onoki: It's fighting back?!

    Naruto: Damn it, it's getting stronger! I need to weaken it first!

    Naruto's grip began weakening as his feet slowly began moving along the ground and towards the Jubi.

    Naruto (In thoughts): The Bijou mode is way heck of a lot weaker without the Kyubi inside me... I still have enough Kyubi chakra to finish this though, before it runs out!

    Tsunade: You can do it! Don't give up!

    Naruto: I should have just enough chakra for a bijou bomb!

    Naruto stretched his arms out as the head of the fox began forming in pure chakra in front of him. In matter of seconds, it was done as Naruto sent it straight at the Jubi with his last might.

    Naruto: Take this!

    Hitting the Jubi straight on, the Jubi tumbled over as it fell over on its back. Naruto's Bijou mode ran out as it reverted back to the Nine Tails Chakra mode.

    Naruto: *Pant, Pant*...*Huff, Huff*... Almost there!

    The speed of which the chains were reverting back inside Naruto began moving faster as the Jubi got closer and closer.

    Onoki: It's working!

    The rest watched carefully as their pulse was at the limit. It seemed like Naruto was just about to drag the Jubi inside him, when suddenly the Jubi shot up in the air and landed, upside down, in the ceiling of the barrier.

    Tsunade: Naruto!

    Naruto was dragged along the ground as he was lifted up in the air. The Jubi then Jumped down, aiming to land straight on top of Naruto.

    Naruto: Shit!!

    In a last ditch attempt, Naruto managed to use his speed as he evaded the Jubi just in time. He was just about to continue the ritual as the Jubi sent out a mighty shockwave, causing the chains to slowly break, one by one.

    Naruto: What?!

    The Jubi roared loud and viciously as the chains shattered in all directions.

    Onoki: It can't be?!

    The Jubi grew bigger and bigger as Naruto watched in despair.

    Naruto: It's not working! *Pant, Pant*

    The Nine tails mode ran out as Naruto realized he was running out of options.

    Naruto: *Pant, pant*... This leaves me no choice... Tsunade, I will have to use that jutsu!

    Tsunade: What?!! You can't?! If you do, you will die in the progress!

    Naruto: I don't have any other choice! It will be the only way I can seal him now!

    Confused about what jutsu the two of them were talking about, Onoki and the rest pressed the matter.

    Onoki: What jutsu are you talking about?

    Tsunade: The Dead Demon Consuming Seal... The dreadful jutsu which takes the soul of anyone who uses it...

    A: What?!

    Mei: But he can't do that, he will die!

    Sakura: ...

    Shikamaru: He has to... there is no other options available...

    Jiraiya: But... but... he can't do that?! There got to be another way.

    Hinata: ...

    Naruto: I have to!! It will work this time, no matter what!

    Onoki: It will work this time?! What does he mean by that?

    Tsunade: The Dead Demon Consuming seal, is said to have existed for all eternity, and that it was created in the time of the Sage of Six paths. The only known users to have used this technique so far are Minato Namikaze and Hiruzen Sarutobi, in both scenarios, ending in their deaths. But there is also another saying...

    Mei: Which is?

    Tsunade: That the jutsu never was completed...

    A: What?!

    Tsunade: Much like the Rasengan once were, the Dead Demon Consuming Seal is an uncompleted Jutsu... or so the legend says...

    Onoki: Then what makes it incomplete?!

    Tsunade: It's been searched and studied on for a long, long time, and I believe Minato was close on cracking the code before he died... He always used to say that it is impossible for a Jinchuriki to perform the seal, though it is unclear of what he meant by that...

    Mei: Impossible as in a Jinchuriki can't preform this jutsu because of their beast, or because, if they do, something else other than resulting in the user's death will happen?

    Tsunade: I'm not sure...

    A: But Naruto is no longer a Jinchuriki! He got the Kyubi ripped out of him!

    Naruto: I still have some of its powers! I should be able to replace my soul with the remaining Kyubi chakra!

    Tsunade: But you don't know if it will work! Nobody has ever tested it out properly! In worst case scenario, you will die!

    Naruto: We won't know until I've tried though... And unless I stop the Jubi, we all will die!

    Naruto slammed his hands together as he began summoning natural chakra. The Jubi charged at him as it sent his arms after him, causing several shock-waves flying towards Naruto. Naruto jumped off from the ground, with his palms still together as he ran along the arms of the Jubi and landed on top of its head. The Jubi's tails slashed at Naruto as Naruto disappeared and reappeared several times in the air, before hitting the ground.

    Tsunade: He's able to use the Flying Thunder God again?!

    As Naruto landed on the ground, he opened his eyes as his sage mode had turned on again. But this time, it was different... This time, it had the eyes of the Kyubi mixed in, forming a cross in each of his eyes.

    A: How is he able to still use the chakra of the Kyubi?!

    Naruto: Heh!

    Naruto then disappeared and reappeared several times around the Jubi as the ground began cracking under its feet.

    Onoki: So fast!

    The ground then crumbled as the Jubi sunk into it.

    A: That's earth style!

    Naruto: Doton: Yomi Numa (Earth Style: Swamp of the Underworld)!

    A large muddy swamp began spreading around the Jubi as it began sinking even more into the ground. The Jubi slammed its arms into the nearby solid ground as it tried to drag himself out of it. A large roar was heard as the Jubi noticed Naruto charging in at him.

    Naruto: This is it!

    Naruto then disappeared as he reappeared right in front of him. The Jubi swung his right arm, trying to hit Naruto, as Naruto jumped up into the air to avoid it. The Jubi then charged up a Bijou bomb, more fierce and powerful than anything created before.

    Naruto: !!

    Tsunade: It's huge!...

    Large shock-waves began leaking from the bomb as the Jubi charged it up more and more until it finally was ready.

    Shikamaru: Naruto!! That thing might even be powerful enough to break down this barrier! There are shinobi spread in all directions, if it hits the other side of it, it might cause catastrophe and leave several injured!

    Naruto: ?!

    Realizing what Shikamaru meant, Naruto quickly drew forth a kunai as he placed it in front of him.

    Naruto: Then what about this!

    Just as the Jubi shot the Bijou bomb, the mud under it dragged it even further down as a large crater formed beneath it. The Bijou Bomb went straight for Naruto as Naruto screamed out;

    Naruto: Hiraishin no Jutsu, Jikūkan Kekkai (Flying Thunder God technique, Teleportation Barrier)!

    The bomb crashed straight into him with a mighty force as Naruto was pushed back, causing his feet to drag along the ground as the ground began craking beneath him. The bomb then suddenly vanished as it reappeared on top of the Jubi.

    Naruto: Not done yet!

    The bomb was just about to crash on top of the Jubi, whom were still stuck in the gigantic crater in the ground, as Naruto vanished and reappeared into the air above the bomb. Naruto quickly preformed some hand seals as a transparent looking barrier wrapped around the crater as the bomb went off inside it with the Jubi. Everything happened so fast, that a normal human eye couldn't catch it.

    Tsunade: ?!

    Naruto landed on the ground again as the barrier above the crater with the Jubi vanished.

    Naruto: *Pant, Pant*

    Onoki: You've done it! Now that you've weakened it, you can move in for the sealing ritual!

    A large smoke slowly filled the air as flames erupted from the crater. The Jubi was no place to see, when rocks suddenly began cracking and the Jubi's arms slammed out of it.

    Naruto: Now!

    Large chakra began leaking out of Naruto as a shadow began forming behind him, that only he could see. He leaped straight in front of the Jubi as a large arm stretched out through his stomach and grabbed a hold of the Jubi. The Jubi began roaring fiercely as its chakra began leaking from it and into Naruto.

    Naruto: *Pant, Pant, Pant, Pant* Its chakra is too huge! *Huff, Huff, Huff*... No... I can still make it! I have to, this has to work.. ugh!

    Blood spat out from his month as more and more of the Jubi began merging into him. The Jubi shrunk more and more as it slammed its arms and tails in all direction, causing several rocks, shock-waves and fire to spread wildly.

    Naruto: ... Ugh! It's working!

    Onoki: !!

    Tsunade: Just a little more now!

    A: I thought the tale of Minato was that the Kyubi was too big to be sealed inside the Dead Demon consuming seal?! How is Naruto able to seal the Jubi inside it?!

    Tsunade: He's not sealing it inside the dead demon consuming seal...

    A: What?!

    Onoki: He's sealing it inside himself.

    Mei: But how?! This jutsu is said to seal the target inside the death god's stomach, not the users?

    Tsunade: The incomplete jutsu of the dead demon consuming seal that is...

    A: ?!

    Tsunade: If this works out as Naruto has planned it... He has indeed found a way to perfect it.

    Mei: So what about the Death God? Isn't it required to seal something withing it's stomach for this jutsu to work?

    Tsunade: That's why he need something to replace the soul of the target and/or himself...

    Naruto: Almost there!

    The Jubi began gravitating in the air, in front of Naruto as its size had shrunk to the one of an elephant.

    Naruto (In thoughts): Now I need to feed the death god with the replacements... Ugh... *pant, pant* I'll seal part of the soul of the Jubi and the remaining Kyubi chakra I have left. If I can seal away the anger of the Jubi, I'll have better chances of making this work as well!

    The ground around Naruto exploded as the force of the Jubi and the Death God crashed into Naruto's stomach. The ground cracked as cracks spread across the field at an intense speed. A powerful wind flew in all directions as the shinobi army felt the force of it through the barrier, forcing them to cover their faces with their arms.

    Onoki: Look!

    Naruto: *Pant... pant*

    The Death God swung his knife as a red-like chakra emerged out of Naruto and disappeared behind him. Then it all went silent as Naruto fell to one of his knees. Fearing the worst, that the jutsu failed and that Naruto's soul was taken as well, Tsunade and the rest screamed out to him as he fell on his stomach, with his face towards the ground.

    Onoki: It...

    Tsunade: Nooo!!

    Jiraiya: Dad!!!!

    Lying there, lifeless and not moving, the shinobi army around the barrier began chattering amongst themselves on what happened as Tsunade, Sakura, Hinata, Jiraiya and countless others fell to their knees in despair.

    Hinata: Naruto... Naruto!!

    A: It can't be... Did it fail?!

    When all hope seemed lost, The rest of them suddenly noticed Sasuke began moving as he wake up and came to his senses.

    Kurotsuchi: Sasuke!

    Still bleeding badly, and not in an understanding of what just had happened, Sasuke noticed Naruto lying lifeless on the ground as he rushed over to check on him. Half way there, he fell to one of his knees, but quickly managed to get back up on his feet. Landing beside Naruto, clutching his wound with his left hand and trying to get contact with Naruto with his right, the rest watched silently as they waited patiently for Sasuke to give them some answers.

    Sasuke: *Pant. Pant* Naruto... *Pant*, Are you alright?

    Grabbing a hold of him and shaking him lightly back and forth, Sasuke still didn't get any responds from him as the thought of the worst outcome stroke him.

    Sasuke: Naruto, wake up god damn it! You can't end like this, people are counting on you!

    Tears began flowing down his cheeks as he pressed him closer to himself. The rest watched in shock as they realized what had happened.

    Sasuke: Damn it, not like this! I was the one who were suppose to die in this fight, not you!

    The tears continued to flow down his cheeks as Jiraiya and Hinata almost collapsed on the ground in tears.

    A: Tsunade, didn't you say this would work, huh? Huh!

    Frustrated and not sure on who to take his anger out on, Raikage A Angrily turned his frustration towards Tsunade.

    Tsunade: I...

    In response, Tsunade fell to her knees as she laid her face into her arms as she began crying out violently, as sadness and sorrow spread across the army.

    ?: Oi... what is everyone crying about... Sasuke...

    Sasuke: !! I... I...

    A: ?!

    Sasuke: Naruto.. you're alive?!

    Naruto: I'll manage, ugh... You cry baby.

    Realizing that Naruto was alive after all, Sasuke pressed him harder towards himself, refusing to let go of him as tears of joy ran down his cheeks.

    Naruto: Oi... Sasuke... Not so hard, I can't breath.

    Jiraiya: Dad!!!

    Glad that he was still alive, Sasuke let go of Naruto as Naruto stood up on his feet again. Sasuke forced himself up too, as the two of them went over to the side of the barrier were Tsunade, Raikage A, Mei, Onoki, Jiraiya, Sakura, Hinata, Shikamaru, Kurotsuchi and the rest stood. A brief conversation occurred between them as they began discussing how to get the barrier down. Knowing that Sasuke would need medical treatment from Tsunade, Sakura or Ino as soon as possible, Naruto stressed the matter as Shikamaru thought out a plan.

    Shikamaru: Tsunade-sama, you said that the only way to get this barrier down was to force Kabuto to release it... That means, we need to localize him and that fast. Kakashi and Gai was tracking Akashi further up north in the country, which means that that's the way we should head and look for them right now.

    Tsunade: You're absolutely right. Konohamaru, Shikaku, want more do you know of this. The smallest details will help.

    Konohamaru: Kakashi had market the target with some sort of a blood sample, so that he could track him down with the help of Pakkun.

    Shikaku: Akashi was definitely retreating to meet up with Kabuto, which means that they'll most likely rendezvous some place.

    Sasuke: Before I got here, I ran into Kabuto, Akashi and the other two Akatsuki members, Nobunaga and Ryu. We had a brief talk before I agreed to let him go in exchange of a free entrance into this barrier to help Naruto. He was definitely scheming something of his own.

    Naruto: This means that Akashi already had met up with Kabuto long time ago, even before the battle here began.

    Shikaku: That also fits the timeline of how things have happened. But that Akashi guy was damn fast in getting back with Kabuto and the rest.

    Shikamaru: We should scout for them right away, so that we can end this once and for all. Sai, if you could...

    But as Shikamaru was just about to lay down the final details of the plan, the ground behind Naruto and Sasuke began shaking heavily as the ground suddenly cracked, causing an explosive, sending rocks blasting in all directions.

    Shinobi Army: ?!!

    ?: *Huff... Huff... Huff... huff... huff* Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh... Hoyahhh!

    A shadow emerged into the air, as Tobi stood gravitating in front of them.

    Naruto: So you're not done after all...

    Tobi: You think I would go down that easily!!

    A large burst of chakra began surrounding him as his body structures began changing, causing him to grow bigger as a tail formed on his back and his arms turned into two large, gold-colored, double-sided swords. He then span around a couple of times in the air, before he landed on the ground as he stretched himself out and stood up as high as he could. Measuring over 12 feet tall, Tobi looked nothing like he ever had before.

    Sasuke: What on earth is that?!

    Naruto: !!

    Tobi: You won't escape me this time... I shall be completed, no matter what!

    Naruto: Is it some sort of a strange version of his Asura path?! He looks nothing like a human anymore!

    Tobi: I can't believe it... It just can't be?! How are you able to contain the power of the Jubi inside you when I couldn't?!

    Naruto drew forth a kunai, as he charged it with all of the five basic elements as Sasuke was unable to muster up strength to help him out.

    Naruto (In Thoughts): I can feel the Jubi still resisting within me. I need to end this quick so that I can concentrate on controlling his power to avoid him breaking free again.

    Sasuke: Naruto... I'm completely out... Can I count on you to deal with this one?

    Naruto: Not a problem.

    With a grind on his face, Naruto sensed victory within his grasps.

    Tobi: Hah, you still need to be able to control the power of the Jubi to be able to use it!

    Naruto stepped forward as his kunai cut open the ground beside him as he dragged it with him, ripping it up as he slowly approached Tobi. Tobi then raised his arms up in front of himself as he readied himself to charge at Naruto. Naruto slowly began moving faster and faster as the two of them clashed with each other at great speed.

    Naruto: Now it's my turn!

    Naruto suddenly vanished as he reappeared behind Tobi, slashing his five element kunai at his back. Tobi roared out as he tried to turn around, swinging his arm-swords at Naruto. Just as he was about to hit him, Naruto vanished again, but this time, he kept going as he used the Flying Thunder God to its full extend and dealt massive damage to Tobi from all sides, before Tobi managed to react.

    Naruto: Rasengan!

    Appearing right in front of Tobi, Naruto smashed his Rasengan into Tobi's stomach as Tobi was pushed backwards along the ground from the blow. Naruto then vanished once again as Tobi suddenly felt his present behind him.

    Tobi: ?!

    Naruto: This is it!

    Naruto went to plunge his kunai straight through Tobi's back, but as he made contact, he realized that due to Tobi's mechanic transformation, his defense were increased dramatically. It was as if his whole body was covered in metal.

    Naruto: !!

    Tobi: Not that fast!

    Tobi swung around as their swords clashed for several rounds. The two of them then jumped back to gain space, before they charged straight at each other and clashed their swords together again. Naruto swung his kunai at Tobi from his left side as Tobi slammed both his arm-swords down to parry. They locked in a fierce stalemate as Naruto vanished once more. He suddenly reappeared again as seven clones stood beside him. They circled around Tobi at great speed as a loud piercing sound could be heard.

    Naruto: Futon, Rasenshuriken!

    Naruto and his seven clones had all formed a Rasenshuriken each as they threw it at Tobi at the same time. The Rasenshurikens went back and forth between the clones as they were still circling Tobi at great speed, hitting him too many times to count. Naruto and his clones then jumped back as Naruto continued to steer the eight Rasenshurikens in a circle pattern around Tobi, until they all crashed into him, causing a huge explosion.

    Sasuke: You got him?!

    As the wind settled and the rocks landed, the thick smoke was still clearing as flames spread from were Tobi was hit. As it settled, Tobi still stood standing as he was torn up all over his body.

    Tobi: *Pant, pant*

    Naruto: Impossible?! What kind of armor is that?!

    Tobi: *Huff, huff* I already told you... I will stand victorious!

    Naruto: ...Time to end th.. ugh..

    Suddenly Naruto grabbed his chest as he fell to his knees.

    Naruto: (In Thoughts): What...?!

    Sasuke: Naruto?!

    Tobi: ?! The power of the beasts, it's finally affecting you too... To absorb all their souls and powers at once is even too much for you as well it seems...

    Naruto: It can't be?!

    Tobi (Inner Thoughts): This fight has gone too far, I can't risk trying to capture Naruto at this stage. I'll just have to kill him now and re-capture the Jubi when he resurrect later... This is my chance!

    Tobi turned his head towards Sasuke's sword, that was stuck in the ground just beside him. He pulled it up as lightning and fire began forming around it, before he threw it straight for Naruto.

    Sasuke (In Thoughts): He's aiming for Naruto!! I got to stop him!

    Tobi: This is the end!

    Naruto (In thoughts): Ugh, I got to stand up, stupid legs move!

    Sasuke's sword got closer and closer until it was just about to hit Naruto. Without any sign of halting its movement, it was heading straight towards him to deliver a fatal blow...

    Naruto: ?!!

    Blood splat on his face as his body frozen in shock.

    Tobi: ...

    Naruto: Sa... why?!

    Sasuke: Ugh... Somebody has to protect your weak ass after all, scaredy cat... heh, ugh!

    A grind on Sasuke's face quickly changed into tremble as he started coughing up blood.

    Tobi: So you were still able to move I see.

    Sasuke's own sword had hit him straight through his chest as Sasuke jumped right in front of the blow meant for Naruto. Blood dripped on the ground as Sasuke pulled the sword out of himself as he dropped to his knees, with the sword falling on the ground beside him.

    Naruto: Sasuke I...

    A flashback went through Naruto's head as he saw Sasuke fall to his knees.

    Naruto (In thoughts): I couldn't save Killerbee... and now...

    Trying to get up, Naruto quickly fell to the ground again as the after-effects of absorbing the beast had pulled a heavy toll on him. He tried to reach out his hand in an attempt to reach Sasuke as the alliance out side the barrier watched horrified of what was about to happen.

    Sasuke (In thoughts): I guess this was my part to play after all... The only thing I wanted was to stop Tobi and redeem myself for all I've done, yet my legs moved on it's own to save Naruto. Heh, this reminds me of older days when the both of us fought Haku and Zabuza.

    Sasuke looked up as Tobi stepped in front of him. Tobi's right arm changed back to normal as he stretched it out and grabbed him.

    Sasuke (In thoughts): My eyes... My vision... it's getting blurry... Is this it? Is this the end for me? Is this as far as I'll go? Brother... I've failed you...

    Sasuke's sharingan deactivated as Tobi lifted him up from the ground and high up in the air.

    Naruto: No..oo! Don't you touch him Tobi! Leave your hands off him! I swear, if you even lay one more finger on him.. ugh..

    Tears dropped down Naruto's cheeks as he tried to reach out for Sasuke.

    Tobi: About time you got out of my way!

    Naruto: !!

    Tobi threw Sasuke up in the air, and as he was on his way down, he punched him hard in the stomach as Sasuke went flying up in the air again.

    Tobi: Not yet! Universal pull!

    Before Sasuke managed to land on the ground, Tobi swiftly pulled Sasuke towards him again as he met him half way with a roundhouse kick. Sasuke whom where flying straight towards him was hit dead on and the impact sent Sasuke flying across the battlefield and into the other side of the barrier, where Sakura, Onoki and the rest stood, before he crashed to the ground.

    Sasuke: Ah...hhh!

    Sakura: Sasukeeeeeee!!

    Sasuke crashed into the barrier, right before Sakura's face as she started banging on the barrier, trying to get through. Her voice barely reached through the thick barrier as Shikamaru pulled her back from it. She was struggling to break free as tears ran down her cheeks.

    Naruto: No...no-oooooo...ahhhhh!!!

    Unable to do anything, Naruto witnessed helplessly as Tobi gave Sasuke the fatal blow.

    Gaara: It can't be?!

    A: First my brother and now Sasuke...

    Mei: Such a handsome man... what a terrible fate... We... will have to believe in Naruto now.

    In anger and despair Naruto started banging his fists to the ground as he screamed out loud.

    Naruto: Tobiiiiiiiiiiiii!!!!!!

    Naruto's tears streamed down his cheeks as he forced himself up. He was panting heavily.

    Tobi: One down... One to go.

    In pure rage, Naruto managed to force himself up on his feet. Seemingly having recovered a bit after sealing the Jubi, he proceeded to preform some hand-seals as four shadow clones appeared. He then stretch out his right hand as chakra began forming in it and wind manipulation right after. But none of the four clones had approached his hand, as if they were waiting for something.

    Tsunade: What?! He's able to do a Rasenshuriken without a clone and with only one hand and in this state?!

    Tobi: Doing another Rasenshuriken eh? Seems like this is the last bit of your strength.

    Naruto (In thoughts): Stupid Jubi, let's see what your powers really can do!

    Tobi (In Thoughts): This is my chance to make my move. One final attack and I'll end this fight once and for all! If I don't deal with him fast, I will be in trouble. Getting the beasts ripped from me has taken it's toll. The battle has dragged on too long and I'm almost out of strength as well. I need to end this now!'

    Tobi started charging at Naruto with his left hand still being formed into an arm-sword by the Asura path, but as he was just about to make contact with Naruto, he was suddenly flung on his back, crashing towards the ground.

    Tobi: What?! His Rasenshuriken has never had this kind of force before?

    As Naruto was charging up the Rasenshuriken, huge shock-waves, like never before, circled around him and blew Tobi away and sent him flying through the air. At the moment the shuriken was charged, everyone looked at Naruto intensely, expecting him to throw it towards Tobi. However instead of sending the Rasenshuriken flying at Tobi, the four other kage bunshin approached his hand.

    Tobi: ?!

    Onoki: Is he going to use...?

    *Flashback Begins*

    Naruto: So that's what the bloodline expansion is all about then?

    Onoki: Indeed. However boy, there is something I've wanted to talk to you about for awhile. I'm pretty sure you know that most people remembers Hashirama Senju, the 1st Hokage for having one of the most powerful bloodline limits out there, the wood element.

    Naruto: Yeah, what about it?

    Onoki: Well there is said to only be me, and the 2nd Tsuchikage, Mü, that has been able to reach the next stage of developing a bloodline expansion, consisting of three elements.

    Naruto: Yeah, so I've heard.

    Onoki: Well back in the days when I was even younger than you are now, there was some rumors going around after Hashirama's battle with Madara.

    Naruto: Rumors?

    Onoki: Yes... That in his final battle against Madara, Hashirama showed of his most powerful technique to finish the fight. A technique that was never confirmed to be known by him. They say he saved it for that battle and that battle alone.

    Naruto: His most powerful technique? A technique better than his wood element?

    Onoki: Yes indeed. They say that he as well was able to go further than a bloodline limit.

    Naruto: So you're saying that he had a bloodline expansion technique just like yourself?

    Onoki: Well not exactly. They said that this technique was so powerful, that it was even better than my own Dust element.

    Naruto: What? So you're saying that he had a technique, a bloodline expansion so powerful that it was even greater than your dust element? A jutsu that he saved for his battle with Madara and that he only used it once in his life?

    Onoki: It was said to be more powerful than the dust element, but the rumors had it that it was not a bloodline expansion element or jutsu.

    Naruto: Not a bloodline expansion element or jutsu?

    Onoki: They said that this technique... was an bloodline technique stretching up till four elements combined.

    Naruto: Four elements?!

    Onoki: Yes... a technique that they namely called a bloodline extension, and that Hashirama was the only person to ever live since the two sons of the Sage of Six Paths that was able to obtain a bloodline extension.

    Naruto: You're not even joking are you?...

    Onoki: Well that's what the rumors were, nobody had any proofs of it, and the only person to this date that could prove if he ever had such a technique is no other than Madara himself...

    *Flashback ends*

    Naruto: I will beat you no matter what to end the chain of pain and hatred you have brought upon this world!

    One of the clones closed in on Naruto and began adding another element to it. Water streams began to spin in the same pattern as the wind, forming a mix between wind and water shuriken.

    Tobi (In thoughts): He's going to use a new technique? I can't let him!

    Tobi began to run towards Naruto in an attempt to stop him.

    Naruto: Not yet!

    As the first clone was done adding the water element to the Rasenshuriken, one of the other stepped up.

    A: What is he doing?! There is no way he can add another element to it and create a bloodline expansion!

    Onoki: Don't be so sure, believe in Naruto.

    Blue-like fire erupted around the Wind-Water Shuriken as intense Fire began to spin around it. Tobi was getting closer and closer to Naruto, but as he readied his weapon to strike, a kage bunshin struck him from below, emerging from the ground, sending Tobi flying on his back again.

    Tobi: Ugh!... *In thoughts;* 'Damn him for taking out my sharingan. It would have been much easier to fight him if I could have teleported!'

    Tobi once again picked up his feet as he came for Naruto once more.

    Mei: Is he going to throw the attack soon? It's rare for one to have more than three elements, yet along been able to form or combined them together to make a stronger attack.

    Shikamaru: It can't be? He learned another one too?!

    As the second clone had finished up adding the fire element, the third one stepped forth and pointed out his hand over the already intense and unbelievably noisy shuriken. Suddenly the ground beneath Naruto began to crack as several huge pieces of rocks began to circle and merge the shuriken, almost hitting both Naruto and the clones. Cracks in the ground spread fast and even ran its way over to the barrier and Tobi's feet.

    Tobi: Unbelievable... To think you of all people would be able to reach Hashirama's level! No one in recent times except him was able to create an attack on the level of a bloodline extension?! No one except for my younger brother and father, The Sage of Six Paths himself!

    Naruto: *Pant Pant* So it was true after all then... The 1st Hokage did indeed use a bloodline extension jutsu to finish Madara of back in the days...

    Tobi: !!

    Everyone: !!

    Naruto: But this is more than a bloodline extension... As you can see, I've only mixed four different elements so far...

    The fourth and last clone went over to him, and he too stretched out his hand. Lightning bolts began to roar from the skies and stuck down to the ground as they merged with the already powered up Shuriken. From a distance, it could seem like Naruto was holding a super nova! Wind waves, thin Water streams, Blue-like fire spins, Rocks and lightning bolts were all circling Naruto's Shuriken.

    Naruto: *Pant* Pant*... I call it, the Super Nova Element!

    Sakura: No way!!

    Shikamaru: How is it possible?

    A: ...

    Gaara: Amazing!

    Tsunade: I didn't even know that Naruto had more than three elements!

    Onoki: If there was one ninja in this world ever except from the Sage of Six Paths and his sons, that could pull of such a technique, it would have to be Naruto. I believe mixing five elements to create a new one, was once recognized as... Bloodline Explosion!

    Tobi: It can't be?!

    From Tobi's point of view, you could see mirrors of former famous ninjas. They all had stretched out their arms, placing them on Naruto's shoulders. As Tobi looked closer, he saw the Images of Minato, Kushina, Jiraiya, Asuma, Hiruzen, Itachi, Tobirama, Hashirama, Mito, Nagato, Konan, Killerbee and Chiyo standing behind him.

    Naruto: With this technique... my ultimate jutsu... I will finish you off, once and for all!

    Tobi (Inner thoughts): *pant... pant* It can't be?! This is the same as back then when Madara fought Hashirama and when I fought my brother!

    Something about what Naruto said awoken a memory in Tobi's mind.

    *Flashback begins*

    Uchiha Madara/Uzumaki Madara (In Unison): Impossible?! How did you acquire such a powerful technique?!

    Senju Hashirama/ Uzumaki Sasuke (In Unison): It doesn't matter now, *Pant, Pant*... with this technique... my ultimate jutsu... I will finish you off, once and for all!

    *Flashback ends*

    Fear-struck, Tobi didn't know what to do as he saw history repeat itself once again.

    Hashirama/Naruto (In Unison): This time, there won't be another battle!

    Tobi: !!

    Hashirama/Naruto (In Unison): With my newly developed jutsu, you will die!

    As Tobi looked at Naruto, he saw the mirror of Hashirama standing beside him.

    Tobi (Inner thoughts): Impossible?! If I get hit by that, there won't be any coming back, even with my Zetsu-soul transferring technique!

    Naruto flung the super huge and super powered up shuriken at intense speed towards Tobi, but due to the enormous force, Naruto's arm started to melt as it blew right off him in the process, sending Naruto flying backwards. Even before Tobi was able to think, he was struck with full power and smashed through the top of the barrier, which began to crumble in the process, and shot several 100 yards away crashing into a mountain-top. It crated an explosion like never before, leveling the whole mountain down in the process. Everyone watched in ave, as all that was left was a crater reaching over 100 yards down into the ground and 200 yards wide. Tobi was turned to dust in an instant as lava began erupting from the bottom of the crater. Raikage A and several other shinobies from Kumo hurried over to check on Killerbee, while the rest hurried over to Sasuke, except from Hinata, Jiraiya, Sakura and Gaara, who ran straight for Naruto.

    Tsunade: Ino, come quickly!

    Sasuke: I...no..

    Ino: Don't speak!

    She moved to help Tsunade preform medical treatment on him as the rest gathered around. Fear struck, Kurotsuchi watched from behind, unable to decide what she could do to help.

    Sasuke: Don't bo-th...er, it's too la-te...

    Sasuke's wound was deep as Tobi had plunged the sword through his chest, hitting several vital spots. Naruto who stood still, unable to decide what to do, noticed five blue-green orbs coming out of the crater where Tobi was blown to pieces as Hinata flung herself at him with her arms wrapped around his waist.

    Hinata: You're alright!!

    She cried as she hugged him the best she could.

    Naruto: It's all over now...

    Jiraiya: Dad, your arm?!!!

    Sakura: Hinata, let me check on his wound.

    Hinata: Right.

    Sakura: You idiot, what type of attack was that?! You blew off your arm! I don't know where to begin... You're lucky to even be alive!

    She forced him to sit down as she began treating his wound.

    Sakura: I need to stop the bleeding as quickly as possible... at this rate, you will lose a lot of blood!

    Naruto, bleeding terribly from his arm being ripped off by his own technique, carefully watched the orbs closely as they flew towards him and began circling around him at intense speed. It was as if he felt no pain from the wound and as if it wasn't a big deal at all.

    Gaara: Naruto, what's happening?

    Sakura backed off for a moment as the orbs suddenly stopped in their track, just gravitating beside him. Bright green and blue light emerged from the orbs as Sakura and the rest had to cover their eyes to not be blinded by it.

    Naruto: I... don't know?? Can this be...?

    Then suddenly they all struck straight into Naruto's body, lifting him up in the air as he screamed out in pain. An Intense rainbow colored chakra began to erupt from Naruto and shot in all directions, lightning up the sky.

    Hinata: Naruto?!

    Only seconds after the beam of rainbow colored chakra emerged, it flung back into Naruto's body as he went to the ground. Hinata hurried to his aid, but to her surprises, he suddenly stood up, covered in his Bijou mode. However, this time it was different. This time... it was Complete...

    Gaara: ??

    Naruto: ... What's happening to me?

    Naruto felt a feeling he never had before, as suddenly he notice something strange.

    Naruto: My... arm?!

    To his surprise, his arm that had been blown off previously had miraculously grown back.

    Naruto: What is this power?

    ? (Sinister Voice): You haven't figured out what those orbs are yet?

    Naruto: !!

    Gaara: What's the matter?

    Naruto: A voice, but it's not the voice of the nine tails.

    Naruto ventured inside himself to check for himself as the face of the Jubi met him.

    Naruto: The Jubi...

    Jubi (Sinister Voice): I'm the Jubi, the monster of earth, water and heaven... How can a brat like you be able to seal me inside you?! Not since the Sage of Six path's era have I been completed. And when the time finally came when he was no longer here to stop my resurrection, you managed to seal me away?! When I get out of here, I will eat you alive!

    Naruto (Inner thoughts): So you know how to talk as well... Then tell me... tell me about the orbs.

    Jubi (Sinister Voice): Humph, don't expect me to cooperate that easy! I will tell you, but only as a reward for defeating me... The orbs represent the different paths... After the son of the Sage of Six paths got destroyed, the paths that he had gathered transferred to you. And with me being the 6th path... you're now complete.

    Naruto (Inner thoughts): Then why didn't he become complete when he absorbed and sealed you inside himself? And what are the other paths?!

    Jubi (Sinister Voice): ... Even if you have all the paths, you still have to naturally grasp them... meaning that someone without a pure body won't be able to control them all at once. Once you've naturally awakened all the paths within you, you will become... complete...

    Naruto (Inner thoughts): So Tobi's own soul transferring jutsu became his own downfall...??

    Jubi (Sinister Voice): The five other paths are... Senju... Uchiha... Uzumaki... Hyuga and finally... Rinnegan... Kid... what is your name?

    Naruto (Inner thoughts): My name is Uzumaki... Uzumaki Naruto!

    Jubi (Sinister Voice): As I thought... you are his reincarnation after all...

    Naruto (Inner thoughts): ?!

    Sakura: Naruto??... your... eyes?!

    Naruto: What about them?

    Jubi (Sinister Voice): You will need time to adapt to this new power... the power of the Sage of six paths... until then...

    With that, the voice slowly settled as Naruto came back to reality.

    Gaara: It can't be?!

    Suddenly Naruto noticed that everything around him had changed... He could see things he never had before as he scouted around the area.

    Gaara: The Rinnegan?!

    Naruto: !!

    Realizing what the Jubi meant, Naruto was shocked hearing what Gaara confirmed for him.

    Ino: Naruto, Sakura!! Quickly, get over here!

    Naruto came to himself as he heard Ino's call for him. He ran over to check on Sasuke with Sakura close behind.

    Sasuke: Na..aa-ruto...Sa..kura... Kurotsuchi... Come clo-o-ser.

    Naruto: Save your strength Sasuke!

    Naruto, Sakura and Kurotsuchi bent down on their knees beside him as tear drops from Naruto began to drop on Sasuke's body. Ino and Tsunade were still preforming their medical jutsu on him, as Tsunade looked up at them and nodded in a sighing way. Sakura and Kurotsuchi couldn't hold back as stream of tears began to stream down their cheeks as well, while Ino still tried to heal his wound, refusing to give up.

    Sasuke: Your eyes Naruto... They've changed... *cough cough* ...I'm sorry... I couldn't do mo-re in the ba..a.tt-le.

    Naruto: Sasuke don't give in! You're going to be fine!

    Sasuke: It's too... la-te.. and the wo...o-und too d...ee-p. Stop... crying.. for me... heh, you cry babies...

    Realizing he wouldn't make it, Sasuke's last bit of life force slowly went out of him.

    Naruto: Don't give in! Not now...

    Kurotsuchi threw herself over his body as she began to cry tremendously. Naruto reached out for her shoulder, but to no vain.

    Onoki: Kurotsuchi... Kurotsuchi, he's dead... Sasuke's de...

    Still refusing to let go, Ino was still preforming her medical jutsu as Tsunade tried to make her realize the regrettable truth.

    Shikamaru: ...

    Sakura: Sasuke... it can't be!

    She said as she helplessly tried wiping her tears away. Naruto placed his right hand on his chest as he looked at him with a long, deep and sad face.

    Gaara: It's nothing that can be done...

    Naruto stood up and turned his back to the rest as he looked up at the skies.

    Naruto (In thoughts): Killerbee... Sasuke... Why wasn't I able to save you. Why wasn't I strong enough! If I only had been stronger, this wouldn't have happened!

    His tears continued to streamed down his cheeks as he tried to come up with something to do.

    Sakura: !!

    Shikamaru: Impossible?!

    Tsunade: How can it be??

    Kurotsuchi: Sasuke!!

    From behind Naruto, Sasuke had suddenly re-awakened and his wounds healed as he sat up. Naruto turned around to check what was happening as he saw that Sasuke was alive. Unable to react, Naruto just stood there, shocked of what just happened.

    Sasuke: I'm... alive?

    Tsunade: What just happened? You just died?! Your heart had definitely stopped!

    Sasuke: I... I... Don't know.

    Kurotsuchi jumped on him, hugging him as hard as she could, refusing to let go.

    Shikamaru: !!

    Tsunade: What is it?

    Shikamaru: It can't be? Naruto!

    Naruto: Yeah?!

    Shikamaru: What just happened to you? When those orbs went into you?

    Gaara: You said something about the Jubi?

    Everyone: ?!

    Onoki: Could it be... that when you defeated Tobi, the paths that he had collected was absorbed by you?

    Naruto looked down at his hands.

    Naruto: ... Yes, the Jubi said that those orbs represented the five paths and that he was the 6th one... With all paths gathered, I was... complete.

    Onoki: How do you feel?

    Naruto: I feel... I feel full of life and strength. I...

    Puzzled about what he just had occurred, Naruto went over to Raikage A and the Kumo Shinobi a couple of yards further away as the rest followed. He sat down beside the body of Killerbee as he looked at his hands once more.

    A: What on earth have you become?

    Shikamaru: When you placed your hands on Sasuke something happened! That got to be it!

    Onoki: If it's true that you now have all the paths of the sage, then it must mean you've become what Tobi always aimed for!

    Naruto: !!

    Naruto remembered something Tobi said right before the battle begun

    *Flashback Begins*

    Tobi: My true goal... is to become complete. By gathering all the six paths, I will become the perfect being. What my father never took the opportunity to become... A god! I would be unstoppable and none would be able to resist me!

    Naruto and Sasuke: ?!

    Naruto: You can't be serious?!

    Sasuke: So that's your true goal, not to put the world under eternal genjutsu, but to become the new Sage of Six Paths!

    Tobi: However...

    Naruto: !!

    Tobi: I've collected five of the six paths so far and only one remains. Naruto... your Kyubi will be mine and I will obtain the final path!

    Sasuke: So merging all the bijous and restoring the Jubi, would mean that you would have one path... The last path, the final step in becoming the perfect being, as powerful as the Sage of Six Paths himself?!

    Tobi: Exactly...

    *Flashback Ends*

    Tobi mentioned the same as the Jubi just told me...

    Shikamaru: It can't be?

    Onoki: It's no other explanation, with the Jubi, you have the final piece to the final path and when you defeated Tobi, you absorbed his five paths!

    Everyone: !!

    Onoki: ...

    A: Impossible!

    Naruto looked upon Killerbee as he laid his hands on his body.

    Naruto: It's worth a try!

    Bright light began to leak out of Naruto as everyone stepped back. The light expanded to Killerbee's body as a ray of light went through his body, lifting him up from the ground and in the air. Naruto got up on his feet as the light began to leak out of Killerbee's entire body. Suddenly the light retracted, as Killerbee slowly landed on the ground again. Everyone watched closely in both ave and shock, witnessing the scene.

    Naruto: Come on, work!

    Suddenly a laud gasp for air came from Killerbee as he came back to life!

    Mei: I'm speak-less...

    A: Brother?! You're alive!

    He grabbed Killerbee by the arm and grasped him tightly.

    Killerbee: What's happening? Where are we. I was... dead?

    Shikamaru: I don't know how you pulled that off Naruto, but it seems like...

    Onoki: He's become a god!

    ~ End Chapter 6


    Next time, the hunt for Kabuto begins!

    Fun Fact: Everything in this chapter, except the fight against the Jubi, was written over a year ago.
     
         
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    You know, you always say "this is the longest chapter I've ever written and that I'll ever write," yet you keep making them longer This was really good. Probably the best chapter yet.
     
         
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    Okay If no new posts has arrived by then, I'll do the same... Otherwise, I'll just quote your edit in a new one. Looking forward to a review
     
         

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    I want that to happen wease:
     
         

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    Omg....omg......omg......THAT WAS EPIIIIIIICCCCCCC
    I knew that sasuske was gonna die.....lol....but neva imagined the last part
     
         

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    Even before becomming a GOD naruto had soooo many OP jutsus......even back then no one except tobi could have given him a challenge
    N I read a line when naruto fights tobi......which says something about clashing of swords o_0
    Naruto with a sword seems a bit different(actually I cant picturise him with a sword )
    The part about drs which you created......that it was not completed n later completed by naruto was just awesome!!!!!!!
    N the best thing.....if you really did write this stuff a year ago.........hats off to you dude......ultimate respect!!!
     
         

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    To much Mike, way to much. Naruto getting those powers is over op. Nice chapter doe
     
         

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    Naruto, the God? Oh my...
    That was one hell of chapter, everything that happened was epic.

    Well, my eyes hurt to be honest. I know you've heard that alot but is true.
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by gordo1 View Post
    You know, you always say "this is the longest chapter I've ever written and that I'll ever write," yet you keep making them longer This was really good. Probably the best chapter yet.
    Haha, yeah, but this is the first chapter to ever take up over 100 kb on my hard-drive, and none of my previous chapters have ever got close to that (well except chapter 2 of the sequel which ended on 92 kb I think).

    I agree, lol. I personally find this to be my best chapter action-wise, but I'm unsure if it's the best chapter written/story-wise.

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    I want that to happen wease:
    Haha, that would be sick Thanks for reading ^^

    Quote Originally Posted by Flash07 View Post
    Omg....omg......omg......THAT WAS EPIIIIIIICCCCCCC
    I knew that sasuske was gonna die.....lol....but neva imagined the last part

    Even before becomming a GOD naruto had soooo many OP jutsus......even back then no one except tobi could have given him a challenge
    N I read a line when naruto fights tobi......which says something about clashing of swords o_0
    Naruto with a sword seems a bit different(actually I cant picturise him with a sword )
    The part about drs which you created......that it was not completed n later completed by naruto was just awesome!!!!!!!
    N the best thing.....if you really did write this stuff a year ago.........hats off to you dude......ultimate respect!!!
    Haha, thanks mate Yeah that last part was sick writing, lol, so many things going on at the same time.

    Yeah I know... and now... he's unstoppable That's how I imagine he will end up when the manga ends. Well he uses a kunai and forms it into a sword with one of his elements

    I was very unsure about that part actually, as I went back and forth a lot to decide how to make it work without Naruto dying. In the end, I thought this was the only way it could work.

    Thank you my friend ^^ I wrote about 50 % of this chapter over a year ago. The only thing I didn't write was the fight with the Jubi, as I at that point only knew how I wanted this fight to end. It was around the time of July I think, when I was still in process of writing the last chapter of my Original work (The Legendary Sage of Konoha chapter 15), which ended in a cliffhanger. I already then knew that I wanted to do a sequel, and even if I knew that I didn't want to start the sequel by continuing this fight, I knew how I wanted this fight to end. The thing about the Super Nova Element is actually an idea I've had for over 1 and a half year now.

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    To much Mike, way to much. Naruto getting those powers is over op. Nice chapter doe
    Haha, like I said at the beginning of this chapter; Either you will love it or you will hate it Thanks ^^

    Quote Originally Posted by Gilda View Post
    Naruto, the God? Oh my...
    That was one hell of chapter, everything that happened was epic.

    Well, my eyes hurt to be honest. I know you've heard that alot but is true.
    Haha, thanks ^^ I personally think it might be the best action packed chapter I've written yet. And even if it might appear as the FF is coming to an end now, I still only have come about halfway through this sequel.

    Haha, I like to think of it as a long good movie (Lord of The Rings, Batman The Dark Knight, Dark Knight Rises, The Godfather, Casino, Goodfellas, etc). Some people like shorter films, but most of the best seller films are quite long. Same thing goes with chapters, the longer they are, the more good stuff you get into them
     
         

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    I love this chapter
     
         

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    Yeah I saw you in the fan fic poll and I decided to give you a read. Voted for you immediately. Your writing is so great haha thank you for writing this fan fic so I could have something good to read while I wait for Naruto Chapters to come out
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by Inanimated View Post
    Yeah I saw you in the fan fic poll and I decided to give you a read. Voted for you immediately. Your writing is so great haha thank you for writing this fan fic so I could have something good to read while I wait for Naruto Chapters to come out
    Thank you very much my good man, that means a lot Haven't heard something new for a long time.
    In matter of fact, new readers at this stage is not really common for me. Have you read through my whole FanFic, or just the chapters of this sequel?
     
         

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    I was pleased that there were significant deaths like Bee and Sasuke dying but Naruto had to go God Mode on us and revive them like it was nothing. And Naruto...All Elements ? God ? I've told you this but you've OP'd the shit outta him. Naruto handle the Juubi ( after sealing it ) almost to easily but I guess that needed to be done or he'd be dead. Haha

    There should be a limit on how many times one can nearly pass out, fall to one knee and get up again to repeat the process. I'd expect it and accept it from Naruto but not so much from Sasuke. He lasted quite awhile with that wound, I've already forgotten whether he got impaled or slashed cut, if he got impaled then it's understandable...As far as fiction goes. It is nice to see that he was so intent on redemption, I think his only way of redemption is to constantly seek it and not forgive himself. Kinda cruel but he made some moronic decisions.

    What was really nice was where everyone acknowledged the demise of Bee and Sasuke. Nice and strong emotive scene you portrayed there. However, the revival kinda takes away from that moment in retrospect.

    Part one of your FF > Part two. The whole Naruto being Kami thing was a bad move, along with revivals. Unless it's Dbz, revivals should be kept to a minimum of 1 per 500 chapters. And 0 for FF. IMO of course.

    All in all, a good chapter.
    Looking forward to the Man Hunt of Kabuto and more of Akashi.
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by Abysmal. View Post
    I was pleased that there were significant deaths like Bee and Sasuke dying but Naruto had to go God Mode on us and revive them like it was nothing. And Naruto...All Elements ? God ? I've told you this but you've OP'd the shit outta him. Naruto handle the Juubi ( after sealing it ) almost to easily but I guess that needed to be done or he'd be dead. Haha

    There should be a limit on how many times one can nearly pass out, fall to one knee and get up again to repeat the process. I'd expect it and accept it from Naruto but not so much from Sasuke. He lasted quite awhile with that wound, I've already forgotten whether he got impaled or slashed cut, if he got impaled then it's understandable...As far as fiction goes. It is nice to see that he was so intent on redemption, I think his only way of redemption is to constantly seek it and not forgive himself. Kinda cruel but he made some moronic decisions.

    What was really nice was where everyone acknowledged the demise of Bee and Sasuke. Nice and strong emotive scene you portrayed there. However, the revival kinda takes away from that moment in retrospect.

    Part one of your FF > Part two. The whole Naruto being Kami thing was a bad move, along with revivals. Unless it's Dbz, revivals should be kept to a minimum of 1 per 500 chapters. And 0 for FF. IMO of course.

    All in all, a good chapter.
    Looking forward to the Man Hunt of Kabuto and more of Akashi.
    Haha, well it will take ages for him to learn to use the power of The Sage of Six Paths though, as the Jubi explain to him in the next chapter (which also includes a full background story on the SoSP himself). So his current state will look weak compared to the end of this Fic O_o

    Indeed, he would have turned out like Tobi if he hadn't xD

    Haha, I understand your points But yeah, it's not called fight to the end for nothing bro.

    Yeah it does, but it all builds on the progress of Naruto becoming the new SoSP. Let's face it, I did in fact say on the beginning of this chapter that you would either love or hate what I was going to do with Naruto And when you see what I have in store for Naruto, you will understand why I "had" to make him a God, but I ain't going to spoil that just yet.

    The next chapter will have a lot of explaining from the Jubi at the beginning, so lots of stuff to look forward too! And yeah, Akashi is actually in the next one
     
         

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    Haha, well it will take ages for him to learn to use the power of The Sage of Six Paths though, as the Jubi explain to him in the next chapter (which also includes a full background story on the SoSP himself). So his current state will look weak compared to the end of this Fic O_o

    Indeed, he would have turned out like Tobi if he hadn't xD

    Haha, I understand your points But yeah, it's not called fight to the end for nothing bro.

    Yeah it does, but it all builds on the progress of Naruto becoming the new SoSP. Let's face it, I did in fact say on the beginning of this chapter that you would either love or hate what I was going to do with Naruto And when you see what I have in store for Naruto, you will understand why I "had" to make him a God, but I ain't going to spoil that just yet.

    The next chapter will have a lot of explaining from the Jubi at the beginning, so lots of stuff to look forward too! And yeah, Akashi is actually in the next one
    Weak right now ? They're already calling him a God .

    Fair enough.

    Currently, Naruto becoming the next SoSP is a Wtf moment. I'll judge again when you've finished your FF...If I remember

    Again, looking forward to it.
     
         

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    Well, I’ve finally caught up! I had to literally read from chapter 13-15 of the original story before moving onto the first of this sequel-that is how bad my memory is
    -_-

    Anyways, I decided to do what you did for the chapters you were behind in my fanfiction lol Now prepare yourself for my super huge feedback of each chapter 1-6

    Return Chapter 2:This chapter was very character development material which is always important. I didn’t think you get that personal with Jiraiya/Miyuki’s love scene lol O.O So, I liked how you were pushing Ino towards Sai but KibaxTenten was very unexpected to say the least lol I suppose its because I had always pictured Neji with her but your depiction is interesting. Poor Shino always getting ignored lol As I read about Homura/Koharu declaring Naruto Hokage-I thought not only are these two still alive but have yet to pay for what they’ve done in the manga/your fanfiction-I just felt disgust and hopefully they will get what they deserve in your story at the very least. I’m sorry for the mini rant-its the Sasuke in me. I had the same reaction as Naruto when he “fell off his chair as he crawled back up again and slammed his hands onto the table” to the news about SasukexKurotsuchi I was still in hopes that Sasuke and Sakura would find their way back to each other but this baby should solidify that never happening -_- I was really surprised by Fukasaku showing up and when he also included Konohamaru to come. I was very saddened to hear about the man with evil intent along with the redeeming man *cough* *cough Sasuke* who both will die T_T I did like KakaxYugao’s coupling and the fun fact was crazy. Also Kakashi has finally gotten some lovin I also liked what Naruto proposed in the meeting about maximizing every students abilities. And so this chapter was backstory to everything that wasn’t clarified in past chapters-nice and it was very well thought out. This chapter was probably your longest However, I liked how you unfolded it and it was very insightful even though there were also some things that were disappointing to me because of my favoring of a certain character lol It was a grand read overall!

    Return Chapter 3: Well this chapter was a blend between the future and past. About the future segment, there was much character development and I can’t remember if you revealed Miyuki to be Sasu/Kuro’s kid before this chapter but nevertheless I’m happy that you mixed Naru/Sasu’s kids together (even though I wish it was SasuxSaku’s offspring instead). I think you displayed this development very well.

    As for the past segment which will always be my favorite part due to you know who lol I like how you continue to keep the suspense going. Neither Naru/Sasu or “Tobi” are backing down and each hold their ground. Finally the counterattack on the Zetsu army has begun thus Tobi should be feeling concern about his current situation. However, Naru/Sasu have exhausted most of their chakra by the looks of things which on the other hand can turn out to be bleak in their favor and with the Great Toad Sage’s prophecy it would appear that Sasuke’s end is close which is truly the worst alternative for me -_- I can’t remember if his prophecies always come out to be true or if fate can be changed but nevertheless I would hope so for Sasuke’s fate.

    Return Chapter 4: This chapter possessed a massive amount of insight into the Kage/their forces situation which is necessary and I’m glad you did that, as it gives even more character development to Konoha 10/side characters ^.^ I loved the way you described and depicted each Kage and Konoha 10 mainly as it seemed correct and very much like what Kishimoto would do I was very happy however, when you returned back to Naru/Sasu fight. I loved how you depicted a weakened Sasuke as the trolls/haters believe that he is without backdraws, infinite chakra, etc. but you displayed him having exerted his doujutsu/chakra basically to its limit and this is how Kishi has intended his prowess as well I liked how you presented Naruto possessing all of the elemental chakra but didn’t have him master each one perfectly as Kishi wouldn’t do the same seeing as he loves to illustrate Naruto training more so than powerups. It was a nice touch with the Sarutobi theme btw I also liked the combination between the five elemental chakra infused kunai as well as “Tobi” taking advantage of the Rikudou (Six Paths). I absolutely loved the part when Sasuke bought Naruto some time by utilizing his katana abilities and I remember a troll who denied him possessing the skills to wield a katana properly lol He has been one of few ninja who have continuously wielded a type sword through the continuation of Part II of this manga and I’m glad you portrayed him in that manner And then you immediately caught off and shifted to the Zetsu war battlefield which left me a little hollow inside lol I can’t tell you how surprised I was when Jiraiya came onto the scene with Chidori/Rasengan in each hand-it was the perfect combination and tribute to Sasu/Naru ^.^ And what a feat Konohamaru has overcomed by mastering Sennin Mode/Rasenshuriken. Your writing reminded me of mine in terms of when I incorporated flashbacks for the main purpose of displaying insight into something would otherwise might not have been completely understood by the readers Nice thinking by having Tsunade remember Orochimaru/Hiruzen’s fight in a report which would be logical. Great insightful chapter overall and I know this is late but congratulations on the 25th chapter anniversary! :D

    Return Chapter 5: This chapter immediately started off action packed and it had me at the edge of my seat especially when reading Sasuke’s struggle against “Tobi”. I quickly began to feel an uncertainty for Sasuke’s fate when he was impaled with his katana but I loved how he was able to turn that potential bleak situation around! ^.^ Thankfully, Naruto thought ahead and prepared medic-wise for an emergency and it appeared as though Sasuke would be okay for the time being which was enough for me to heave a sigh of relief lol Then comes Zetsu-like these two needed anymore on their plate which prompted my concern for Sasuke’s well being once more -_- “Tobi”’s identity claim was surprising but interesting. When you shifted back to the Kage(s)/ninja alliance, I was like “is this it will Naru/Sasu’s battle not continue until next chapter?” but when Onoki commented on catching sight of the barrier-I was elated Shikamaru’s comment about how the barrier was bigger than Konoha, was very surprising lol Upon reading about Sakura slamming her arms against the barrier and how Sasuke staggered over to her area made me envision him placing his stretched hand just half an inch from the barrier as she too did the same and then that connection they once had (more on her sided) would awaken :D Okay seriously, as I continued reading you indeed made this scene come to life-I swear my thought on this was first and when I read it-I was amazed and loved it!!! ^.^ However, their moment rapidly crumbled when Kurotsuchi appeared T_T

    Nice implementation with the Naraka Path-I completely forgot about that path lol I almost couldn’t believe how “Tobi”’s plan worked and he quickly gained the advantage over N and S. And when Sasuke decided to give his chakra to Naruto-I was like well this is the end but he was still surviving by a strand *sigh of relief* Then all hope seemed lost when he had Naruto by the neck but the situation exploded as the Juubi emerged out of Tobi and stood on its own. I think “Tobi” used his Jikuukan Ninjutsu (Space–time Ninjutsu) to avoid being buried by the rocks and how ironic my friend-if you know what I mean Wow, an overwhelming fantastic chapter and I cannot wait for following chapter!!! ^.^ Oh and btw, your note about chapters 4 / 5 being originally a single chapter was just insane lol

    Return Chapter 6: Right away, what I pick up from this chapter is Sakura calling Sasuke’s name twice whilst Kurotsuchi only does it once-epic!!! Maybe there is still some hope? I became somewhat concerned when Sasuke didn’t respond to his name being called with the whole prophecy thing -_-

    It was shocking to see that Naruto’s seemingly final attempt was easily canceled by the Juubi. However, he did in fact have one last remaining option being the Shiki Fuujin (Dead Demon Consuming Seal) but it is one of the if not the worst jutsu to exist as the backdraw is devastating. On the other hand, something may occur due to Minato’s quote and from what you stated earlier on in your note. I liked how you thought outside the box as it is fact that in both occasions this jutsu was used incompletely and if done successful-the result may be different which is what was happening with Naruto switching roles sort of speak with the Shinigami After the Juubi was sealed into Naruto and he collapsed without movement, I still didn’t think he died. A;though, I thought something might’ve happened, for instance the Juubi taking over and a transformation but he simply woke up which surprised me lol The both of them okay and Naruto being hugged by none other than Sasuke was astonishing but in a good way of course! :D You know, I completely forgot about about Kabuto/remaining Akatsuki members due to the whole Juubi situation that came out of nowhere and so suddenly lol This battle is still not over! And then “Tobi” appears once more. His form was freaky to say the least and Naru/Sasu had only rested not even five minutes! I loved Sasuke’s quote referring to “Tobi” as a thing As soon as Sasuke took the hit in place of Naruto-I was like this must be it the prophecy turned out to be true and yet he still was clinging to life. In the narration it stated that “Tobi gave Sasuke the fatal blow” and I still couldn’t believe that he was gone.

    I liked how you depicted Hashirama to possess such a kekkei genkai as in my opinion is underestimated the most by members here in the Base. Melding all of the elements into Naruto’s Rasenshuriken was clever on you part The backdraw from this jutsu was losing an arm and it reminded me of the backdraw from the first Rasenshuriken that Naruto used. It also showed that you were brave enough to inflict a devastating injury to a character let alone the main protagonist I loved Tobi’s end as it was very befitting, especially for what for he did to Sasuke! :D With the fact that Sasuke wasn’t incorporated into the gathering of notable deceased ninja whom all appeared behind Naruto-I thought there would still be a chance of his survival and I was right! From the rainbow chakra to absorbing all of the six paths and ultimately, Naruto became the next Rikudou Sennin-this was all just insanity.

    Then Sasuke had to die/ I couldn’t accept his death but you implemented a twist I swear I didn’t see coming and he’s alive again!!!!! The prophecy was somehow overturned-thank god! ^.^ So Naruto practically used a more powerful version of Gedou: Rinne Tensei no Jutsu (Outer Path: Samsara of Heavenly Life Technique) I presume? Through this godly rank that Naruto inadvertently achieved, life returned to Sasuke which I loved lol

    This chapter was obviously the best thus far and I can’t tell you how much I appreciate the fact that you didn’t kill my favored character off when you could have easily. This series is called Naruto so its not much of a stretch for his character to reach these lengths. Phenomenal chapter and yet your series is still not done! You’re an amazing writer and can’t wait to see what else you have up your sleeve my friend
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by Abysmal. View Post
    Weak right now ? They're already calling him a God .

    Fair enough.

    Currently, Naruto becoming the next SoSP is a Wtf moment. I'll judge again when you've finished your FF...If I remember

    Again, looking forward to it.
    You will see soon enough

    Haha, the future has indeed promising things in its path

    Quote Originally Posted by Kuroi Honoo View Post
    Well, I’ve finally caught up! I had to literally read from chapter 13-15 of the original story before moving onto the first of this sequel-that is how bad my memory is
    -_-

    Anyways, I decided to do what you did for the chapters you were behind in my fanfiction lol Now prepare yourself for my super huge feedback of each chapter 1-6

    Return Chapter 2:This chapter was very character development material which is always important. I didn’t think you get that personal with Jiraiya/Miyuki’s love scene lol O.O So, I liked how you were pushing Ino towards Sai but KibaxTenten was very unexpected to say the least lol I suppose its because I had always pictured Neji with her but your depiction is interesting. Poor Shino always getting ignored lol As I read about Homura/Koharu declaring Naruto Hokage-I thought not only are these two still alive but have yet to pay for what they’ve done in the manga/your fanfiction-I just felt disgust and hopefully they will get what they deserve in your story at the very least. I’m sorry for the mini rant-its the Sasuke in me. I had the same reaction as Naruto when he “fell off his chair as he crawled back up again and slammed his hands onto the table” to the news about SasukexKurotsuchi I was still in hopes that Sasuke and Sakura would find their way back to each other but this baby should solidify that never happening -_- I was really surprised by Fukasaku showing up and when he also included Konohamaru to come. I was very saddened to hear about the man with evil intent along with the redeeming man *cough* *cough Sasuke* who both will die T_T I did like KakaxYugao’s coupling and the fun fact was crazy. Also Kakashi has finally gotten some lovin I also liked what Naruto proposed in the meeting about maximizing every students abilities. And so this chapter was backstory to everything that wasn’t clarified in past chapters-nice and it was very well thought out. This chapter was probably your longest However, I liked how you unfolded it and it was very insightful even though there were also some things that were disappointing to me because of my favoring of a certain character lol It was a grand read overall!

    Return Chapter 3: Well this chapter was a blend between the future and past. About the future segment, there was much character development and I can’t remember if you revealed Miyuki to be Sasu/Kuro’s kid before this chapter but nevertheless I’m happy that you mixed Naru/Sasu’s kids together (even though I wish it was SasuxSaku’s offspring instead). I think you displayed this development very well.

    As for the past segment which will always be my favorite part due to you know who lol I like how you continue to keep the suspense going. Neither Naru/Sasu or “Tobi” are backing down and each hold their ground. Finally the counterattack on the Zetsu army has begun thus Tobi should be feeling concern about his current situation. However, Naru/Sasu have exhausted most of their chakra by the looks of things which on the other hand can turn out to be bleak in their favor and with the Great Toad Sage’s prophecy it would appear that Sasuke’s end is close which is truly the worst alternative for me -_- I can’t remember if his prophecies always come out to be true or if fate can be changed but nevertheless I would hope so for Sasuke’s fate.

    Return Chapter 4: This chapter possessed a massive amount of insight into the Kage/their forces situation which is necessary and I’m glad you did that, as it gives even more character development to Konoha 10/side characters ^.^ I loved the way you described and depicted each Kage and Konoha 10 mainly as it seemed correct and very much like what Kishimoto would do I was very happy however, when you returned back to Naru/Sasu fight. I loved how you depicted a weakened Sasuke as the trolls/haters believe that he is without backdraws, infinite chakra, etc. but you displayed him having exerted his doujutsu/chakra basically to its limit and this is how Kishi has intended his prowess as well I liked how you presented Naruto possessing all of the elemental chakra but didn’t have him master each one perfectly as Kishi wouldn’t do the same seeing as he loves to illustrate Naruto training more so than powerups. It was a nice touch with the Sarutobi theme btw I also liked the combination between the five elemental chakra infused kunai as well as “Tobi” taking advantage of the Rikudou (Six Paths). I absolutely loved the part when Sasuke bought Naruto some time by utilizing his katana abilities and I remember a troll who denied him possessing the skills to wield a katana properly lol He has been one of few ninja who have continuously wielded a type sword through the continuation of Part II of this manga and I’m glad you portrayed him in that manner And then you immediately caught off and shifted to the Zetsu war battlefield which left me a little hollow inside lol I can’t tell you how surprised I was when Jiraiya came onto the scene with Chidori/Rasengan in each hand-it was the perfect combination and tribute to Sasu/Naru ^.^ And what a feat Konohamaru has overcomed by mastering Sennin Mode/Rasenshuriken. Your writing reminded me of mine in terms of when I incorporated flashbacks for the main purpose of displaying insight into something would otherwise might not have been completely understood by the readers Nice thinking by having Tsunade remember Orochimaru/Hiruzen’s fight in a report which would be logical. Great insightful chapter overall and I know this is late but congratulations on the 25th chapter anniversary! :D

    Return Chapter 5: This chapter immediately started off action packed and it had me at the edge of my seat especially when reading Sasuke’s struggle against “Tobi”. I quickly began to feel an uncertainty for Sasuke’s fate when he was impaled with his katana but I loved how he was able to turn that potential bleak situation around! ^.^ Thankfully, Naruto thought ahead and prepared medic-wise for an emergency and it appeared as though Sasuke would be okay for the time being which was enough for me to heave a sigh of relief lol Then comes Zetsu-like these two needed anymore on their plate which prompted my concern for Sasuke’s well being once more -_- “Tobi”’s identity claim was surprising but interesting. When you shifted back to the Kage(s)/ninja alliance, I was like “is this it will Naru/Sasu’s battle not continue until next chapter?” but when Onoki commented on catching sight of the barrier-I was elated Shikamaru’s comment about how the barrier was bigger than Konoha, was very surprising lol Upon reading about Sakura slamming her arms against the barrier and how Sasuke staggered over to her area made me envision him placing his stretched hand just half an inch from the barrier as she too did the same and then that connection they once had (more on her sided) would awaken :D Okay seriously, as I continued reading you indeed made this scene come to life-I swear my thought on this was first and when I read it-I was amazed and loved it!!! ^.^ However, their moment rapidly crumbled when Kurotsuchi appeared T_T

    Nice implementation with the Naraka Path-I completely forgot about that path lol I almost couldn’t believe how “Tobi”’s plan worked and he quickly gained the advantage over N and S. And when Sasuke decided to give his chakra to Naruto-I was like well this is the end but he was still surviving by a strand *sigh of relief* Then all hope seemed lost when he had Naruto by the neck but the situation exploded as the Juubi emerged out of Tobi and stood on its own. I think “Tobi” used his Jikuukan Ninjutsu (Space–time Ninjutsu) to avoid being buried by the rocks and how ironic my friend-if you know what I mean Wow, an overwhelming fantastic chapter and I cannot wait for following chapter!!! ^.^ Oh and btw, your note about chapters 4 / 5 being originally a single chapter was just insane lol

    Return Chapter 6: Right away, what I pick up from this chapter is Sakura calling Sasuke’s name twice whilst Kurotsuchi only does it once-epic!!! Maybe there is still some hope? I became somewhat concerned when Sasuke didn’t respond to his name being called with the whole prophecy thing -_-

    It was shocking to see that Naruto’s seemingly final attempt was easily canceled by the Juubi. However, he did in fact have one last remaining option being the Shiki Fuujin (Dead Demon Consuming Seal) but it is one of the if not the worst jutsu to exist as the backdraw is devastating. On the other hand, something may occur due to Minato’s quote and from what you stated earlier on in your note. I liked how you thought outside the box as it is fact that in both occasions this jutsu was used incompletely and if done successful-the result may be different which is what was happening with Naruto switching roles sort of speak with the Shinigami After the Juubi was sealed into Naruto and he collapsed without movement, I still didn’t think he died. A;though, I thought something might’ve happened, for instance the Juubi taking over and a transformation but he simply woke up which surprised me lol The both of them okay and Naruto being hugged by none other than Sasuke was astonishing but in a good way of course! :D You know, I completely forgot about about Kabuto/remaining Akatsuki members due to the whole Juubi situation that came out of nowhere and so suddenly lol This battle is still not over! And then “Tobi” appears once more. His form was freaky to say the least and Naru/Sasu had only rested not even five minutes! I loved Sasuke’s quote referring to “Tobi” as a thing As soon as Sasuke took the hit in place of Naruto-I was like this must be it the prophecy turned out to be true and yet he still was clinging to life. In the narration it stated that “Tobi gave Sasuke the fatal blow” and I still couldn’t believe that he was gone.

    I liked how you depicted Hashirama to possess such a kekkei genkai as in my opinion is underestimated the most by members here in the Base. Melding all of the elements into Naruto’s Rasenshuriken was clever on you part The backdraw from this jutsu was losing an arm and it reminded me of the backdraw from the first Rasenshuriken that Naruto used. It also showed that you were brave enough to inflict a devastating injury to a character let alone the main protagonist I loved Tobi’s end as it was very befitting, especially for what for he did to Sasuke! :D With the fact that Sasuke wasn’t incorporated into the gathering of notable deceased ninja whom all appeared behind Naruto-I thought there would still be a chance of his survival and I was right! From the rainbow chakra to absorbing all of the six paths and ultimately, Naruto became the next Rikudou Sennin-this was all just insanity.

    Then Sasuke had to die/ I couldn’t accept his death but you implemented a twist I swear I didn’t see coming and he’s alive again!!!!! The prophecy was somehow overturned-thank god! ^.^ So Naruto practically used a more powerful version of Gedou: Rinne Tensei no Jutsu (Outer Path: Samsara of Heavenly Life Technique) I presume? Through this godly rank that Naruto inadvertently achieved, life returned to Sasuke which I loved lol

    This chapter was obviously the best thus far and I can’t tell you how much I appreciate the fact that you didn’t kill my favored character off when you could have easily. This series is called Naruto so its not much of a stretch for his character to reach these lengths. Phenomenal chapter and yet your series is still not done! You’re an amazing writer and can’t wait to see what else you have up your sleeve my friend
    I can't begin to say how glad I am to see that you've caught up :D I've been waiting for a long time on a thought on not only this chapters, but all the chapters in total

    That's actually the first thing I thought of, but this works out perfectly fine

    TLSoKR 2 - Yeah, I thought that I needed to get a lot of "missing links" out of the way with the two first chapters, especially what happened between the 4th great shinobi war till the start of my FF, things that I never had time to explain in my first FF. I did however manage to briefly get in on it through some small flashbacks and during the Sasuke Chronicles, but nothing like this at all. Some people might not have liked it being so much story and development, but I for one felt that it was a necessity and it seems like I'm not alone

    About SasukexKurotsuchi, if you remember, that was already laid out in Sasuke Chronicles 3 - that, and the two of them having two kids with 10 years apart. The reason I added this small scene in this chapter however, was mainly because I got an idea of Sasuke having three children, instead of two, and the only way to do this without waiting, was to give Miyuki a twin brother. Way later in my FF, I'll have something cooked up regarding all this, so it wasn't just for fun sake that I included a second son So basically, I'm a bit surprised that you got surprised about this, as it had already been laid out before, the fact that they're together and have kids that is

    TLSoK 3 - Well I never really revealed her to be before this chapter, but if your memory is astonishing (like Irfan's ), you would remember that Sasuke had a daughter named Miyuki from S. C. 3, whom were two years younger than Jiraiya... So yeah, you could take a guess on this girl being the same character, but this was the first time it was confirmed, so to speak.

    The contrast here is that it's clearly been some fighting going on between the end of chapter 15 and till the start of this fight, so basically there has been a huge fight going on, as explained by outputs from Naruto, Sasuke and Tobi. Like Tobi even said, he was forced to use Izanagi on his MS...

    The whole prophecy thing was a fun little thing that popped into my head at a late stage. I thought it would be cool to get the readers fixed on someone dying, most likely Sasuke from what the Great Toad Sage said, only to surprise them at the end with Sasuke getting revived together with Killerbee. Personally, I think that is one of my favorite twists in this series so far

    TLSoK 4 - Thanks Even if some people may think that I put too much focus on the rest of the alliance, I thought it was necessary to keep a strong and realistic storyline. Glad to hear that I seemed to have pulled it off ^^

    Oh you liked the Sarutobi theme added in? I was quite unsure on whether to add it or not as I was uncertain whether or not it would break up the sequence and ruin the "realistic" feeling, but I thought it played out well, and I might add some other themes in the future

    Well, better late than never I've already set my eyes on the 50th release xD

    TLSoK 5 - About Tobi, I do feel that this might have been a "read at that moment" situation, as I wrote that part in right before his identity was revealed in the manga... So I'm not sure if one would get the same feeling reading that now. Haha, well maybe Sasuke and Sakura's grandchildren or something will get together to make up for the "lost love" between Sasuke and Sakura

    TLSoK 6 - Thank you so much Ivan, your inputs always means the world to me as a writer and as a person Your insight are always great to read, especially what you have to say about Sasuke. When I think back, I have a feeling that I incorporated Sasuke and gave him a way bigger role than I originally thought back when I started, because of you, and I do not regret it one bit I hope you don't feel like I don't have much to reply back with, but most of what you said it more of something I like to take in, and even if I don't really have much to reply back with, it means everything to read such reviews. Replying with too huge of a reply isn't always necessary either as it would just cause a circle of never ending replies, but I do think that since you are the reviewer, it's more of a mean to read and acknowledge what you write than creating equally big walls of text, if you get what I'm saying. I could be writing way more in this reply, but like I said, I would want to take in and digest what you said and evolve as a writer Besides, there weren't a lot of questions that I saw. Please add anything if there was something that I skipped that you wanted to talk about

    Yes, the future looks bright indeed As I've already told some people, I'll add a note on my next chapter explaining what to come... and I think some people might get a bit shocked to say the least
     
         

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    You will see soon enough

    Haha, the future has indeed promising things in its path



    I can't begin to say how glad I am to see that you've caught up :D I've been waiting for a long time on a thought on not only this chapters, but all the chapters in total

    That's actually the first thing I thought of, but this works out perfectly fine

    TLSoKR 2 - Yeah, I thought that I needed to get a lot of "missing links" out of the way with the two first chapters, especially what happened between the 4th great shinobi war till the start of my FF, things that I never had time to explain in my first FF. I did however manage to briefly get in on it through some small flashbacks and during the Sasuke Chronicles, but nothing like this at all. Some people might not have liked it being so much story and development, but I for one felt that it was a necessity and it seems like I'm not alone

    About SasukexKurotsuchi, if you remember, that was already laid out in Sasuke Chronicles 3 - that, and the two of them having two kids with 10 years apart. The reason I added this small scene in this chapter however, was mainly because I got an idea of Sasuke having three children, instead of two, and the only way to do this without waiting, was to give Miyuki a twin brother. Way later in my FF, I'll have something cooked up regarding all this, so it wasn't just for fun sake that I included a second son So basically, I'm a bit surprised that you got surprised about this, as it had already been laid out before, the fact that they're together and have kids that is

    TLSoK 3 - Well I never really revealed her to be before this chapter, but if your memory is astonishing (like Irfan's ), you would remember that Sasuke had a daughter named Miyuki from S. C. 3, whom were two years younger than Jiraiya... So yeah, you could take a guess on this girl being the same character, but this was the first time it was confirmed, so to speak.

    The contrast here is that it's clearly been some fighting going on between the end of chapter 15 and till the start of this fight, so basically there has been a huge fight going on, as explained by outputs from Naruto, Sasuke and Tobi. Like Tobi even said, he was forced to use Izanagi on his MS...

    The whole prophecy thing was a fun little thing that popped into my head at a late stage. I thought it would be cool to get the readers fixed on someone dying, most likely Sasuke from what the Great Toad Sage said, only to surprise them at the end with Sasuke getting revived together with Killerbee. Personally, I think that is one of my favorite twists in this series so far

    TLSoK 4 - Thanks Even if some people may think that I put too much focus on the rest of the alliance, I thought it was necessary to keep a strong and realistic storyline. Glad to hear that I seemed to have pulled it off ^^

    Oh you liked the Sarutobi theme added in? I was quite unsure on whether to add it or not as I was uncertain whether or not it would break up the sequence and ruin the "realistic" feeling, but I thought it played out well, and I might add some other themes in the future

    Well, better late than never I've already set my eyes on the 50th release xD

    TLSoK 5 - About Tobi, I do feel that this might have been a "read at that moment" situation, as I wrote that part in right before his identity was revealed in the manga... So I'm not sure if one would get the same feeling reading that now. Haha, well maybe Sasuke and Sakura's grandchildren or something will get together to make up for the "lost love" between Sasuke and Sakura

    TLSoK 6 - Thank you so much Ivan, your inputs always means the world to me as a writer and as a person Your insight are always great to read, especially what you have to say about Sasuke. When I think back, I have a feeling that I incorporated Sasuke and gave him a way bigger role than I originally thought back when I started, because of you, and I do not regret it one bit I hope you don't feel like I don't have much to reply back with, but most of what you said it more of something I like to take in, and even if I don't really have much to reply back with, it means everything to read such reviews. Replying with too huge of a reply isn't always necessary either as it would just cause a circle of never ending replies, but I do think that since you are the reviewer, it's more of a mean to read and acknowledge what you write than creating equally big walls of text, if you get what I'm saying. I could be writing way more in this reply, but like I said, I would want to take in and digest what you said and evolve as a writer Besides, there weren't a lot of questions that I saw. Please add anything if there was something that I skipped that you wanted to talk about

    Yes, the future looks bright indeed As I've already told some people, I'll add a note on my next chapter explaining what to come... and I think some people might get a bit shocked to say the least
    Return chapter 2: Your welcome and I'm glad that I could give you a review detailing my opinion for each chapter

    Yes indeed, character development is always an important factor in a story and especially for the side characters in Kishimoto's series which after Part I, the limelight grew dimmer with each chapter release -_- Other may not like it but think its one of the most important things and of course it is successful when does right which you did.

    Wow, well my shock to SasuxKuro's children is due to my alzheimer's memory Thank you for informing me and hopefully this and many other past facts will remain in my mind until the end of your fanfic because judging my brain I wouldn't trust myself lol

    Return chapter 3: I see, Miyuki was mentioned but I simply failed to remember-even with it being about my favroite character of all-I still couldn't remember -_-

    And you're correct in most of your chapters, there is always some form of fighting whether it be past or present lol

    Let me tell you something, that prophecy has been nothing more than torment with every passing chapter since and ending with Sasuke's revival You played that game very well my friend and I was in suspense and surprised the entire time. Throwing so many potential Sasuke death scenes-insane! lol

    Return chapter 4: Yes, despite any reader's thinking you applied too much emphasis on the alliance-I have to say that it was done exceptionally well and reminded me of how Kishi depicted the 4th War arc

    Oh the Sarutobi theme worked as you placed in the right area and the song was befitting of the situation ^.^ Well, I could definitely see you doing 50 chapters easy

    Return chapter 5: I wasn't sure whether you revealed "Tobi"'s identity before Kishimoto did or knew and decided to do your own spin. However, in my opinion I thought you did a better job in terms of choosing the right character. I think that Kishimoto choose incorrectly with Obito and should've went the route you more or less chose to be honest. I've accepted it and all but I think this series would've obtained a bigger impact that way-oh well. Well, maybe their grandchildren will have a love child and then they both realize that they still possessed powerful feelings for one another and they leave their respectful spouses :D *just kidding*

    Return chapter 6: Ah, you’re welcome my friend and I'm glad that my opinions/feedback matter so much to you ^.^

    Oh, I'm happy that my comments about Sasuke so earlier on in your story made a difference and I am even more happy that you decided to incorporate his character even more as well as his former team mates as well Believe me, I would have been fine with a reply of a sentence from you as you’re one of my best friends and you even did a pretty sized wall so don’t count yourself out yet lol And you’re completely right-replies can become quite a never-ending loop Dude, let me tell you something-I think that if one of us had to evolve as a writer it would have to be me as I failed with giving detailed insight into Helvetes and the order in Kotetsu/Izumo’s journeys T_T

    Enough venting, I did in fact have a couple of questions for you and just remember how bad my memory is when you read and answer this lol

    Is Lee Sakura's husband?(as much as it hurts to ask) And is Neji with Tenten?

    As always, I look forward to what you have in store for the future and please don't stress yourself out with replying to every single thing I stated. Your acknowledgement is more than enough and I suppose the answers to my questions
     
         
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    Return chapter 2: Your welcome and I'm glad that I could give you a review detailing my opinion for each chapter

    Yes indeed, character development is always an important factor in a story and especially for the side characters in Kishimoto's series which after Part I, the limelight grew dimmer with each chapter release -_- Other may not like it but think its one of the most important things and of course it is successful when does right which you did.

    Wow, well my shock to SasuxKuro's children is due to my alzheimer's memory Thank you for informing me and hopefully this and many other past facts will remain in my mind until the end of your fanfic because judging my brain I wouldn't trust myself lol

    Return chapter 3: I see, Miyuki was mentioned but I simply failed to remember-even with it being about my favroite character of all-I still couldn't remember -_-

    And you're correct in most of your chapters, there is always some form of fighting whether it be past or present lol

    Let me tell you something, that prophecy has been nothing more than torment with every passing chapter since and ending with Sasuke's revival You played that game very well my friend and I was in suspense and surprised the entire time. Throwing so many potential Sasuke death scenes-insane! lol

    Return chapter 4: Yes, despite any reader's thinking you applied too much emphasis on the alliance-I have to say that it was done exceptionally well and reminded me of how Kishi depicted the 4th War arc

    Oh the Sarutobi theme worked as you placed in the right area and the song was befitting of the situation ^.^ Well, I could definitely see you doing 50 chapters easy

    Return chapter 5: I wasn't sure whether you revealed "Tobi"'s identity before Kishimoto did or knew and decided to do your own spin. However, in my opinion I thought you did a better job in terms of choosing the right character. I think that Kishimoto choose incorrectly with Obito and should've went the route you more or less chose to be honest. I've accepted it and all but I think this series would've obtained a bigger impact that way-oh well. Well, maybe their grandchildren will have a love child and then they both realize that they still possessed powerful feelings for one another and they leave their respectful spouses :D *just kidding*

    Return chapter 6: Ah, you’re welcome my friend and I'm glad that my opinions/feedback matter so much to you ^.^

    Oh, I'm happy that my comments about Sasuke so earlier on in your story made a difference and I am even more happy that you decided to incorporate his character even more as well as his former team mates as well Believe me, I would have been fine with a reply of a sentence from you as you’re one of my best friends and you even did a pretty sized wall so don’t count yourself out yet lol And you’re completely right-replies can become quite a never-ending loop Dude, let me tell you something-I think that if one of us had to evolve as a writer it would have to be me as I failed with giving detailed insight into Helvetes and the order in Kotetsu/Izumo’s journeys T_T

    Enough venting, I did in fact have a couple of questions for you and just remember how bad my memory is when you read and answer this lol.

    Is Lee Sakura's husband?(as much as it hurts to ask) And is Neji with Tenten?

    As always, I look forward to what you have in store for the future and please don't stress yourself out with replying to every single thing I stated. Your acknowledgement is more than enough and I suppose the answers to my questions
    I'll try to keep this short

    3: I'm not sure whether or not I should be glad or sad that the prophecy thingy tormented you so much, but I'm glad it made a impact on you

    4: 50 chapters easy? I'm unsure actually, if I don't hit the 50th mark with TLSoK, I might still hit it within the same universe O__O I've written something about the future of my FF at the end of my next chapter, so you'll have to wait until then to see what I mean

    5: Now that you ask, I'm not sure what I would have done If Kishi had been faster than me, lol.

    6: He sure is O__o Nope. In fact, I never really got into all of the characters and coupling, just some of the main ones. I did mention something about konoha 11 in chapter 2, but it was quite vague indeed. Not sure if I'll ever go into them all in a deeper form later on or not. Not sure if I have time and space at this point to be honest.
     
         
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    I'll try to keep this short

    3: I'm not sure whether or not I should be glad or sad that the prophecy thingy tormented you so much, but I'm glad it made a impact on you

    4: 50 chapters easy? I'm unsure actually, if I don't hit the 50th mark with TLSoK, I might still hit it within the same universe O__O I've written something about the future of my FF at the end of my next chapter, so you'll have to wait until then to see what I mean

    5: Now that you ask, I'm not sure what I would have done If Kishi had been faster than me, lol.

    6: He sure is O__o Nope. In fact, I never really got into all of the characters and coupling, just some of the main ones. I did mention something about konoha 11 in chapter 2, but it was quite vague indeed. Not sure if I'll ever go into them all in a deeper form later on or not. Not sure if I have time and space at this point to be honest.
    3) By all means you are allowed to feel whoever you want And it all worked out thankfully so... lol

    4) Well it seemed like you were being sarcastic so I thought to do the same but what I really meant was that when you put your mind to it you could accomplish anything.

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    6) Okay that’s what I thought and I see. I suppose I thought you paired most of Konoha 11 lol
     
         

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    3) By all means you are allowed to feel whoever you want And it all worked out thankfully so... lol

    4) Well it seemed like you were being sarcastic so I thought to do the same but what I really meant was that when you put your mind to it you could accomplish anything.

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    6) Okay that’s what I thought and I see. I suppose I thought you paired most of Konoha 11 lol
    I'm so glad that you and Irfan finally caught up, and I'm really excited to show what I have in store for you guys later on. This is only the beginning of the action
     
         

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    This one has out-done the others.... Just like Trey Songz said... "SIMPLY AMAZING!"

    No one should bash this chapter about him being over-powered.
    He worked hard for it and we've all been looking forward to this. This was Tobi's goal... he knew it was attainable, but he was missing one piece of the puzzle... Naruto.
    I loved the flow! I loved how how each event blended splendidly with the next... the flashbacks occur just at the right moment.

    The resurrection scenes shouldn't be challenged either. Pain used his jutsu to resurrect the victims from his onslaught of the Leaf. Naruto's jutsu was similar... he's stronger, so as expected, its effect would be different.

    Look out Kishimoto... I would love to see you top this.
     
         

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    This one has out-done the others.... Just like Trey Songz said... "SIMPLY AMAZING!"

    No one should bash this chapter about him being over-powered.
    He worked hard for it and we've all been looking forward to this. This was Tobi's goal... he knew it was attainable, but he was missing one piece of the puzzle... Naruto.
    I loved the flow! I loved how how each event blended splendidly with the next... the flashbacks occur just at the right moment.

    The resurrection scenes shouldn't be challenged either. Pain used his jutsu to resurrect the victims from his onslaught of the Leaf. Naruto's jutsu was similar... he's stronger, so as expected, its effect would be different.

    Look out Kishimoto... I would love to see you top this.
    Awesome post :D

    Yeah, I do agree with you. I thought that this was my best chapter yet, until I released Chapter 8 that is And thanks ^^

    Finally someone agrees 100% with me on this xD I was starting to think that it was just me whom could see this happening at the end of the Naruto Manga

    Haha, yeah

    Keeo those reviews coming my friend ^^
     
         

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    Awesome post :D

    Yeah, I do agree with you. I thought that this was my best chapter yet, until I released Chapter 8 that is And thanks ^^

    Finally someone agrees 100% with me on this xD I was starting to think that it was just me whom could see this happening at the end of the Naruto Manga

    Haha, yeah

    Keeo those reviews coming my friend ^^
    Spoke it like I saw it.

    "...until I released Chapter 8 that is...".... are you kidding me? better?.... I can't wait until I reach it.
     
         

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