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    Vengeance Chapter 3

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    Setting: The House of The Abandoned

    Characters: Izuma, Satan, Izuma's Dad, Izuma's Mother, Hideko, Ichiyo, and Mr Fujima

    New Characters

    Juro- a bully who follows Hideko lead

    Emma- a kind hearted girl who has a secret crush on Izuma

    Mystery Man- more information later on


    The Set-Up

    After a long lecture and an embarrassing class period Izuma runs off and to his room. On his way back to the foster home he thinks to himself "why me?" referring to the apple test. Izuma arrives at the foster home. He is exhausted from his fight and the unbelievable amount of energy he tried to focus on that apple. he walks in the door, the home is silent almost as if no one is there. he goes upsatirs and heads for his room. Once upstairs he finds all the kids outside his room. They look his way and start to chuckle.
    Izuma: what's going on?
    He gets no reply. Out of rage he shoves through the crowd and into his room. He hears laughter again.
    Izuma: stop laughing dammit!!

    He makes it to the door to see Ichiyo hung by his shirt to his door with a note attached. Izuma helps Ichiyo off the door and he takes the note. Izuma reads to himself. Come to the back of the home at 3:30 p.m there is a "present" for you. Izuma crumbles the note up.
    Izuma: who did this to you! He barks at Ichiyo. Ichiyo as frail as usual, whispers in Izuma's ear "Hideko a....." Ichiyo faints from fatigue. Izuma picks Ichiyo up and lies him on his bed. Then he leaves. As he leaves a girl creeps onto his window sill. She wipes the slight fog off of the window and peers into the room to see Izuma leaving. She glances over to the bed to see Ichiyo lying there unconcious.
    Emma: Yikes!! Did Izuma do that?
    Now Outside and infront of the home, Izuma looks up to see Emma.
    Izuma: Hey you, what are you doing up there!? Emma Panicks and falls off of the window sill. Izuma catches her.
    Izuma: are you alright.
    The girl blushes then runs off. Izuma thinks to himself "well that was weird."

    Izuma continues to walk on. He arrives at the back of the home to see no one there. He checks his watch "3:30".
    Izuma: Its 3:30 he looks up he looks around. As soon as he turns around he is punched in the face by Hideko. Izuma collapses to the ground, he tries to get up. But is kicked in the face by Hideko. Izuma's mouth starts to bleed. Izuma touches his mouth and feels the blood. Mortified by the site of blood. Izuma starts to shake.
    Hideko: aww is the baby gonna cry. Said mockingly.
    Juro then joins in to start stomping out Izuma. Juro picks up a trash can and throws it at Izuma.
    Juro: Hahaha now you where you belong.

    Flash back to Izuma's mother being killed.
    Izuma: NO!!!!!!!!!!
    He gets up. His begins to sweat, a thunder cloud appears over head, the wind picks up and the ground starts to shake. Juro touches his ear.
    Mystery Man: it's done...
    Juro grabs Hideko and attempts to run away. A wall of earth appears in front of them. They try to climb the wall and lightning strikes the wall. They then try to run the opposite way Izuma punches both of them in the face. Izuma collapses and passes out. the strom cloud passes by and the ground stops shaking. Hideko and Juro get up and run back inside. A camera on the side of the home zooms in on Izuma. Emma appears shocked by this she drags Izuma inside and to the infirmary.

    Scene changes to Mr Fujima's office. Mr. Fujims is on the phone with someone. The conversation is coming to an end. ..... "god". How about that weather? Mr. Fujima hangs up. He folds his hands and thinks to himself.

    "May the gods have mercy"
     
         
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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    Again very nice job bro! ANd umm one thing though Fix this error "Izuma: Hey you what are you, doing up there!? Izuma Panicks and falls off of the window sill. Izuma catches her."

    Isnt that supposed to be Emma? but still bro good job haha from chapter 2 about his hands and stuff i figured out after thinking about it for a bit, that he uses most elements but wasnt to sure if that was correct or not xD
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    Quote Originally Posted by kokubungi Huygamaki View Post
    Again very nice job bro! ANd umm one thing though Fix this error "Izuma: Hey you what are you, doing up there!? Izuma Panicks and falls off of the window sill. Izuma catches her."

    Isnt that supposed to be Emma? but still bro good job haha from chapter 2 about his hands and stuff i figured out after thinking about it for a bit, that he uses most elements but wasnt to sure if that was correct or not xD
    to early to assume
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    Great chapter again. I loved the intensity.
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    Quote Originally Posted by ItachiLeeHatake View Post
    Great chapter again. I loved the intensity.
    thanks bro
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    Quote Originally Posted by The 4th Raikage View Post
    to early to assume
    True haha very true :D
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    Quote Originally Posted by kokubungi Huygamaki View Post
    True haha very true :D
    chapter 4 will be out tommorrow:D
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    Quote Originally Posted by The 4th Raikage View Post
    chapter 4 will be out tommorrow:D
    Yayyyyyyy
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    Quote Originally Posted by kokubungi Huygamaki View Post
    Yayyyyyyy
    nm the site crashed so it will be up most likely friday
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    ooh this is goin to get really good soon!! going to chapter four.
     
         

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    Re: Vengeance Chapter 3

    yeah thanks
     
         

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