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    Death Note: The New world

    Death note: The Rebirth
    Chapter 1

    Misa Amane....

    She sits in a bedroom of her home, in front of the television with a glum look on her face.
    "This is sad...ever since then..."
    Says Misa
    "Ever since then, the crime rate has tripled.."
    She sits in this room everyday watching the news, dissapointed at the way society has shifted. She turns her head over to the left at an empty chair.
    "This is beginning to be too much...when can we begin?"
    She ask the seemingly empty space.
    A young boy is standing in the doorway to Misa's room staring at her with a sad expression.
    "Mom.."
    Starts a nameless teenager, the age of 15, with shaggy blonde hair partially in his face, a little unruly.
    "Are you..okay? Talking to dad again?"
    He ask, he begins to think, 'mom has truly lost it, she's been a wreck ever since a few months ago, she keeps talking to herself, telling me its my father.'
    She looks over to the nameless boy.
    "Yes I'm talking to your father.."
    She says with a smile.
    "Well ill leave you to that, I need to go finish my homework."
    He says, he leaves to his bedroom.
    Misa stares at the empty chair some more, then suddenly grows a smile, stands up and quietly says
    "Thank you, its finally time.."
    She walks over to a fire proof safe opens it and takes out a box, inside is a large brown envelope marked "The time has come." She grabs it out after hugging it, then proceeds to leave the room and heads to her sons bedroom.
    "Son" says Misa
    "I have something important to tell you."
    End of chapter 1
     
         

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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    I adore Death note!
    This is nice, keep writing! ^^
     
         

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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    I love it! :D keep it up!
     
         

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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    Thank you I will continue to deliver.
     
         

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    "Powers don't kill
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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    I like it. But do you know Misa killed herself 1 year after Raito's death
     
         

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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    Yeah I know she did but in order for my story I I came up with to work she had to be alive so I changed a few things I posted chapter 3 check it out.
     
         

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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    Quote Originally Posted by WriterX View Post
    Yeah I know she did but in order for my story I I came up with to work she had to be alive so I changed a few things I posted chapter 3 check it out.
    I did its pretty good
     
         

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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    ok it's intresting but why did you change it up a little?
     
         

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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    Quote Originally Posted by julia maltellak View Post
    ok it's intresting but why did you change it up a little?
    I hated the ending to the original, so I wanted to do my own thing, but a completely new story. So I figured it would be a little more interesting with a few new things. Sort of like a "what if" kind of story.
     
         

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    Re: Death Note: The New world

    Quote Originally Posted by Nerow View Post
    I did its pretty good
    I appreciate that thank you.
     
         

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