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    At Last My 1st Bio:

    Hello Everybody!

    As promised I have finally completed my 1st bio. It's still a little rough but I will edit whatever needs to be as the need arises. All the artwork was hand drawn and colored by me. I changed his name to fit his abilities So without further ado...



    Basic Information
    Name:Umare Mako
    Nickname: The Sky Sage
    Gender: Male
    Age: 12
    Clan: N/A

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    Personality: Umare has a carefree personality which often lands him in trouble with his tutors at the Academy. Umare would much rather daydream under the sky than endure rigid ninja training. He is very warm and friendly to strangers and prefers to end conflicts with his words before his fists. When in battle, Umare appears somewhat shy and hesitant which his opponents often mistake as weakness. But when his blood reaches a boil Umare becomes as violent and destructive as a raging storm earning him the nickname “The Sky Sage” Umare's favorite pastimes include cloud gazing, playing shougi, and playing the jabisen(3 string Japanese guitar)


    Village Info.
    Village of Birth: Amegakure
    Village of Alliance: Kumogakure
    Rank//Chakra Info.
    Ninja Rank: Chunin
    Specialty: N/A
    Elements: Wind-Needs Training
    Your ninjutsu:

    (Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
    Rank:E
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:5
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
    Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)

    (Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique
    Rank:E
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:5
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.

    (Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique
    Rank:E
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra:5
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.

    (Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder
    Rank:E
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:N/A
    Damage Points:N/A
    The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.

    (Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique
    Rank:E
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:5
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

    (Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill
    Rank:E
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:5
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).

    (Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique
    Rank:E
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:5
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)


    Background Info.
    History:



    After treating his wounds, Tsunade and her teammates decided to leave the boy near the ruins of the orphanage believing that someone would come to care for him eventually. As they made their way back to Kahonagakure, Juraiyah noticed that Umare had been following them for 3 days. Orochimaru opted to kill the boy as he would only burden them, but Tsunade had a better idea. She had noticed a travelling band of Mountain Monks from Kumogakure and convinced them to take the boy with them as he was an orphan. The kindhearted monks saw no reason to decline her offer and thus Umare was left in their care.

    - When Umare arrived in Kumogakure, he quickly realized how much of an outsider he was. The villagers viewed Amegakure as a cursed village and they feared having an Amegakure shinobi in their home would bring the war to their front doorstep. The monks, however, recognized Umare's potential and thus enlisted him into the Ninja Academy. At the age of 8 he excelled much slower than any other student due to his laid back and often dismissive attitude.


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    Theme Song and Background Music:
    Battles

    Won: 0
    Lost:
    0

    ~Approved~ removed most of your history, there is no Mako clan.
     
         
    Last edited by Caliburn; 12-04-2012 at 03:37 PM.

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Cool
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Not bad
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Needs more pictures and theme music and colours. Its too boring to read right now. But yeah, not bad
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Quote Originally Posted by Skarm View Post
    Needs more pictures and theme music and colours. Its too boring to read right now. But yeah, not bad
    Yeah, as I said, it's kind of rough, but I am drawing more pictures and hammering out the history of the bio abit more but I wanted to have at least 1 bio up to participate in battles and the like. Will update with more detail soon.
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Quote Originally Posted by Yugaro Uzamaki View Post
    Yeah, as I said, it's kind of rough, but I am drawing more pictures and hammering out the history of the bio abit more but I wanted to have at least 1 bio up to participate in battles and the like. Will update with more detail soon.
    kk man, good luck. I pretty much just got started on my first training lesson today :D
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    1. You are not enrolled in medical school so you can't put "medical jutsu - need training"
    2. You are not in Kumo so you can't put "kumogakure" in village of alliance.
    3. I wish you the best and have fun with this bio

    ^__^
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Quote Originally Posted by Cho View Post
    1. You are not enrolled in medical school so you can't put "medical jutsu - need training"
    2. You are not in Kumo so you can't put "kumogakure" in village of alliance.
    3. I wish you the best and have fun with this bio

    ^__^
    She can put any village she wants for village of alliance...it's not official

    Just no medical training...
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Its a nice bio, but you will have to remove Medical Ninjutsu from your bio.
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Oh okay. i will make the changes when I update next.
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    what he said^
    and nice bio pics aren't working
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Darn! And here I thought I had the picture thing figured out, lol. I will try to get them fixed so they display properly.
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    The pics work if you click on them to view them ^_^
     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Here, all the pictures if you're intrested...they're in order







     
         

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    Re: At Last My 1st Bio:

    Some pics would be nice.
    Not bad for a first bio.
     
         

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