Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

[serenaandrosie]

Sleep is good, so it's okay. Enjoy your anniversary! :D

Thank you & yes sleep is very good

Oh God



1 year anniversary of what, writing FF? Anyways, congrats I suppose

Thank you and It is my 1st year wedding Anniversary

I'm good:D And how's Netsui?



For marriage or...something else? Well, congrats either way:D And I've been doing good, I suppose

Thank you and yes of Marriage. that is good that your good I hope college is going well

[chakrawizard555]

I'm good. Somewhat tired, although it is too early for tiredness.

Eh, I woke up only two hours ago, so it's not that bad, I guess

Thank you & yes sleep is very good



Thank you and It is my 1st year wedding Anniversary



Thank you and yes of Marriage. that is good that your good I hope college is going well

I am GOOD!!:overjoy: Well, enjoy your day and yeah, it's going good right now:D Got this one paper that's bugging me, but it's not that bad

[Shinobi Train]

That means you read my OF, right? Do I get criticism!?

Oh...uh...no...I didn't read them... I just know the Wizard's work and he's so very good...though I wish he'd act out is conversations and stuff, they always seem a tad stiff. You actually have to get up and become your characters as if it was a movie or something. ^_^

Oh God

Yes...now if we could only find out what time of the month it is for certain people here...

[serenaandrosie]

Eh, I woke up only two hours ago, so it's not that bad, I guess



I am GOOD!!:overjoy: Well, enjoy your day and yeah, it's going good right now:D Got this one paper that's bugging me, but it's not that bad

thank you it should be a good day & well I hope it goes well for you as well

I still don't know who I am gonna vote for any way I should prob get some sleep I will have to catch with you all when I am on next night all :grouphug:

[Netsui]

Oh...uh...no...I didn't read them... I just know the Wizard's work and he's so very good...though I wish he'd act out is conversations and stuff, they always seem a tad stiff. You actually have to get up and become your characters as if it was a movie or something. ^_^



Yes...now if we could only find out what time of the month it is for certain people here...

You should read all of them before you vote, S.Train. I want your criticism.

[★Skylar Knight]

You should read all of them before you vote, S.Train. I want your criticism.

I agree, I want S.Train's criticism on the 3 chapters I'm competing with

[Shinobi Train]

You should read all of them before you vote, S.Train. I want your criticism.

I agree, I want S.Train's criticism on the 3 chapters I'm competing with

I don't give out crits so easily...besides, I've already told you both what I think. Unless something dramatic has happened, there isn't much need for me to crit.

[Gutsy Jiraiya]

I'm crazy,

next star wars movie is announced im so excited

also working on a new FF and good luck to all

[Netsui]

I don't give out crits so easily...besides, I've already told you both what I think. Unless something dramatic has happened, there isn't much need for me to crit.

I don't remember you saying anything about FTR Chapter 2 and 3. Wait, you didn't say much about Chapter 1. You said great stuff, and that you should give me a proper crit soon.

[chakrawizard555]

Oh...uh...no...I didn't read them... I just know the Wizard's work and he's so very good...though I wish he'd act out is conversations and stuff, they always seem a tad stiff. You actually have to get up and become your characters as if it was a movie or something. ^_^

I do. I use everything I know about the characters to create their dialogue.

thank you it should be a good day & well I hope it goes well for you as well

I still don't know who I am gonna vote for any way I should prob get some sleep I will have to catch with you all when I am on next night all :grouphug:

Night:b

[Shinobi Train]

I don't remember you saying anything about FTR Chapter 2 and 3. Wait, you didn't say much about Chapter 1. You said great stuff, and that you should give me a proper crit soon.

Ummmm...uh...ummmm...:ghehe: did I say that? :ghehe: Well, I think my usual crits still stand, don't they?

I do. I use everything I know about the characters to create their dialogue.

You must act it out though, young padawan. After acting out the scenes for a few years I got to the point where I didn't need to act them out anymore, but first you must become your character for real.

[Netsui]

Ummmm...uh...ummmm...:ghehe: did I say that? :ghehe: Well, I think my usual crits still stand, don't they?





You must act it out though, young padawan. After acting out the scenes for a few years I got to the point where I didn't need to act them out anymore, but first you must become your character for real.

Yes, you said that. I would, but I don't know what I must improve on. You never gave me a crit on this work. xD It's hard to apply crits from a different OF to this OF.

[chakrawizard555]

You must act it out though, young padawan. After acting out the scenes for a few years I got to the point where I didn't need to act them out anymore, but first you must become your character for real.

I do, that's what I said My main characters are mostly just extentions of myself, man, so I always act them out The rest are usually more difficult to do so with, but I always attempt to make their actions as realistic as possible.

[Shinobi Train]

Yes, you said that. I would, but I don't know what I must improve on. You never gave me a crit on this work. xD It's hard to apply crits from a different OF to this OF.

Nope, not so hard actually. You see, every writer has a very distinguished way of writing, it's like a painting or something, you can tell by the brush strokes and the style. Without even reading it I can tell you three things that you need to improve on:

1. Sentence structure. You probably only go over a sentence once or twice and you rarely change one at all. See, every sentence I write I take a moment to think about, even if it's just a post here on NB. I agonize over every word infact, at every turn I practice. Almost every sentence in all the chapters I've posted has been re-written at least once.

2. Vocabulary. This also goes along with sentence structure because often times what you need to re-write a sentence a different way is a stronger vocabulary.

3. Repetition. Again, this goes with vocabulary and sentence structure.

It just so happens that these are some of the hardest obstacles to overcome in writing and they're part of the reason why not everyone is a writer. However, it's a simple matter of putting in the extra effort. I told you the first time we ever talked that you must use every opportunity to train yourself. I just used this post as training, and I use all the others as well.

I do, that's what I said My main characters are mostly just extentions of myself, man, so I always act them out The rest are usually more difficult to do so with, but I always attempt to make their actions as realistic as possible.

Ah, but are you really there? When you write a specific line that holds a lot of power in it, does it send a chill down your spine?

[Netsui]

Nope, not so hard actually. You see, every writer has a very distinguished way of writing, it's like a painting or something, you can tell by the brush strokes and the style. Without even reading it I can tell you three things that you need to improve on:

1. Sentence structure. You probably only go over a sentence once or twice and you rarely change one at all. See, every sentence I write I take a moment to think about, even if it's just a post here on NB. I agonize over every word infact, at every turn I practice. Almost every sentence in all the chapters I've posted has been re-written at least once.

2. Vocabulary. This also goes along with sentence structure because often times what you need to re-write a sentence a different way is a stronger vocabulary.

3. Repetition. Again, this goes with vocabulary and sentence structure.

It just so happens that these are some of the hardest obstacles to overcome in writing and they're part of the reason why not everyone is a writer. However, it's a simple matter of putting in the extra effort. I told you the first time we ever talked that you must use every opportunity to train yourself. I just used this post as training, and I use all the others as well.



Ah, but are you really there? When you write a specific line that holds a lot of power in it, does it send a chill down your spine?

The last point is the one I really want your criticism on, repetition. Sometimes there's things that writers can't see with their own eye.

[Cobra73]

Hello people

Congrats Serena on one year

[Ultimate uzumaki form]

When will ItachiHatakLee be up there ^^
http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...93#post9067393

[Shinobi Train]

The last point is the one I really want your criticism on, repetition. Sometimes there's things that writers can't see with their own eye.

Nothing more to teach you, is there...

[★Skylar Knight]

Nothing more to teach you, is there...

I love Will Smith's words about dreams D
"If you have a dream; protect it!"

Well, I'm going to sleep now guys ^_^ Bye byyyye!

[chakrawizard555]

Nope, not so hard actually. You see, every writer has a very distinguished way of writing, it's like a painting or something, you can tell by the brush strokes and the style. Without even reading it I can tell you three things that you need to improve on:

1. Sentence structure. You probably only go over a sentence once or twice and you rarely change one at all. See, every sentence I write I take a moment to think about, even if it's just a post here on NB. I agonize over every word infact, at every turn I practice. Almost every sentence in all the chapters I've posted has been re-written at least once.

2. Vocabulary. This also goes along with sentence structure because often times what you need to re-write a sentence a different way is a stronger vocabulary.

3. Repetition. Again, this goes with vocabulary and sentence structure.

It just so happens that these are some of the hardest obstacles to overcome in writing and they're part of the reason why not everyone is a writer. However, it's a simple matter of putting in the extra effort. I told you the first time we ever talked that you must use every opportunity to train yourself. I just used this post as training, and I use all the others as well.



Ah, but are you really there? When you write a specific line that holds a lot of power in it, does it send a chill down your spine?

Well, yeah. Of course it does And I'm always THERE. That's how I get my ideas in the first place

Bye, Skylar:b

[Shinobi Train]

Well, yeah. Of course it does And I'm always THERE. That's how I get my ideas in the first place

Hmmm...there's still a stiffness to it though, not sure how to put my finger on it either. How many times do you go over a chapter and make edits? You see, it is much like a woman, you must caress the labia completely, not just the parts you like the most...

[chakrawizard555]

Hmmm...there's still a stiffness to it though, not sure how to put my finger on it either. How many times do you go over a chapter and make edits? You see, it is much like a woman, you must caress the labia completely, not just the parts you like the most...

*grabs pen and paper* (caress...the labia...) I reread them rather frequently, actually, even after I post them.

[Shinobi Train]

*grabs pen and paper* (caress...the labia...) I reread them rather frequently, actually, even after I post them.

:rofl: That was my pervy post for the day, no offence intended, ladies. ^_^

Yeah, I do that too, I always read it at least once after posting, and that's after reading in several times before posting. I always seem to find something I missed too. I'm not sure what to tell ya' then...though it didn't seem to be happening so much with your original story except in a few places.

[Cobra73]

Cobra is being evil ATM :zonder: he shall return in about an hour or two

[Shinobi Train]

Cobra is being evil ATM :zonder: he shall return in about an hour or two

At least shower us with some of that evil...