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  • Michael Westen

    10 22.73%
  • Skylar Knight

    5 11.36%
  • chakrawizard555

    3 6.82%
  • Reborn

    5 11.36%
  • serenaandrosie

    2 4.55%
  • Uxellius

    4 9.09%
  • Netsui

    7 15.91%
  • cobra73

    3 6.82%
  • Ikikouchiha9668

    2 4.55%
  • -Yami-

    3 6.82%
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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Netsui View Post
    I don't remember you saying anything about FTR Chapter 2 and 3. Wait, you didn't say much about Chapter 1. You said great stuff, and that you should give me a proper crit soon.
    Ummmm...uh...ummmm...:ghehe: did I say that? :ghehe: Well, I think my usual crits still stand, don't they?



    Quote Originally Posted by chakrawizard555 View Post
    I do. I use everything I know about the characters to create their dialogue.
    You must act it out though, young padawan. After acting out the scenes for a few years I got to the point where I didn't need to act them out anymore, but first you must become your character for real.
     
         
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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinobi Train View Post
    Ummmm...uh...ummmm...:ghehe: did I say that? :ghehe: Well, I think my usual crits still stand, don't they?





    You must act it out though, young padawan. After acting out the scenes for a few years I got to the point where I didn't need to act them out anymore, but first you must become your character for real.
    Yes, you said that. I would, but I don't know what I must improve on. You never gave me a crit on this work. xD It's hard to apply crits from a different OF to this OF.
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinobi Train View Post
    You must act it out though, young padawan. After acting out the scenes for a few years I got to the point where I didn't need to act them out anymore, but first you must become your character for real.
    I do, that's what I said My main characters are mostly just extentions of myself, man, so I always act them out The rest are usually more difficult to do so with, but I always attempt to make their actions as realistic as possible.
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Netsui View Post
    Yes, you said that. I would, but I don't know what I must improve on. You never gave me a crit on this work. xD It's hard to apply crits from a different OF to this OF.
    Nope, not so hard actually. You see, every writer has a very distinguished way of writing, it's like a painting or something, you can tell by the brush strokes and the style. Without even reading it I can tell you three things that you need to improve on:

    1. Sentence structure. You probably only go over a sentence once or twice and you rarely change one at all. See, every sentence I write I take a moment to think about, even if it's just a post here on NB. I agonize over every word infact, at every turn I practice. Almost every sentence in all the chapters I've posted has been re-written at least once.

    2. Vocabulary. This also goes along with sentence structure because often times what you need to re-write a sentence a different way is a stronger vocabulary.

    3. Repetition. Again, this goes with vocabulary and sentence structure.

    It just so happens that these are some of the hardest obstacles to overcome in writing and they're part of the reason why not everyone is a writer. However, it's a simple matter of putting in the extra effort. I told you the first time we ever talked that you must use every opportunity to train yourself. I just used this post as training, and I use all the others as well.

    Quote Originally Posted by chakrawizard555 View Post
    I do, that's what I said My main characters are mostly just extentions of myself, man, so I always act them out The rest are usually more difficult to do so with, but I always attempt to make their actions as realistic as possible.
    Ah, but are you really there? When you write a specific line that holds a lot of power in it, does it send a chill down your spine?
     
         
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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinobi Train View Post
    Nope, not so hard actually. You see, every writer has a very distinguished way of writing, it's like a painting or something, you can tell by the brush strokes and the style. Without even reading it I can tell you three things that you need to improve on:

    1. Sentence structure. You probably only go over a sentence once or twice and you rarely change one at all. See, every sentence I write I take a moment to think about, even if it's just a post here on NB. I agonize over every word infact, at every turn I practice. Almost every sentence in all the chapters I've posted has been re-written at least once.

    2. Vocabulary. This also goes along with sentence structure because often times what you need to re-write a sentence a different way is a stronger vocabulary.

    3. Repetition. Again, this goes with vocabulary and sentence structure.

    It just so happens that these are some of the hardest obstacles to overcome in writing and they're part of the reason why not everyone is a writer. However, it's a simple matter of putting in the extra effort. I told you the first time we ever talked that you must use every opportunity to train yourself. I just used this post as training, and I use all the others as well.



    Ah, but are you really there? When you write a specific line that holds a lot of power in it, does it send a chill down your spine?
    The last point is the one I really want your criticism on, repetition. Sometimes there's things that writers can't see with their own eye.
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Hello people

    Congrats Serena on one year
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    When will ItachiHatakLee be up there ^^
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...93#post9067393
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Netsui View Post
    The last point is the one I really want your criticism on, repetition. Sometimes there's things that writers can't see with their own eye.


    Nothing more to teach you, is there...

     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinobi Train View Post


    Nothing more to teach you, is there...

    I love Will Smith's words about dreams D
    "If you have a dream; protect it!"

    Well, I'm going to sleep now guys ^_^ Bye byyyye!
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinobi Train View Post
    Nope, not so hard actually. You see, every writer has a very distinguished way of writing, it's like a painting or something, you can tell by the brush strokes and the style. Without even reading it I can tell you three things that you need to improve on:

    1. Sentence structure. You probably only go over a sentence once or twice and you rarely change one at all. See, every sentence I write I take a moment to think about, even if it's just a post here on NB. I agonize over every word infact, at every turn I practice. Almost every sentence in all the chapters I've posted has been re-written at least once.

    2. Vocabulary. This also goes along with sentence structure because often times what you need to re-write a sentence a different way is a stronger vocabulary.

    3. Repetition. Again, this goes with vocabulary and sentence structure.

    It just so happens that these are some of the hardest obstacles to overcome in writing and they're part of the reason why not everyone is a writer. However, it's a simple matter of putting in the extra effort. I told you the first time we ever talked that you must use every opportunity to train yourself. I just used this post as training, and I use all the others as well.



    Ah, but are you really there? When you write a specific line that holds a lot of power in it, does it send a chill down your spine?
    Well, yeah. Of course it does And I'm always THERE. That's how I get my ideas in the first place

    Bye, Skylar:b
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by chakrawizard555 View Post
    Well, yeah. Of course it does And I'm always THERE. That's how I get my ideas in the first place
    Hmmm...there's still a stiffness to it though, not sure how to put my finger on it either. How many times do you go over a chapter and make edits? You see, it is much like a woman, you must caress the labia completely, not just the parts you like the most...
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinobi Train View Post
    Hmmm...there's still a stiffness to it though, not sure how to put my finger on it either. How many times do you go over a chapter and make edits? You see, it is much like a woman, you must caress the labia completely, not just the parts you like the most...
    *grabs pen and paper* (caress...the labia...) I reread them rather frequently, actually, even after I post them.
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by chakrawizard555 View Post
    *grabs pen and paper* (caress...the labia...) I reread them rather frequently, actually, even after I post them.
    :rofl: That was my pervy post for the day, no offence intended, ladies. ^_^

    Yeah, I do that too, I always read it at least once after posting, and that's after reading in several times before posting. I always seem to find something I missed too. I'm not sure what to tell ya' then...though it didn't seem to be happening so much with your original story except in a few places.
     
         
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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Cobra is being evil ATM :zonder: he shall return in about an hour or two
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Cobra73 View Post
    Cobra is being evil ATM :zonder: he shall return in about an hour or two
    At least shower us with some of that evil...
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

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    Cobra is being evil ATM :zonder: he shall return in about an hour or two
    I see why. I shall also return in an hour or two. :zonder:
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinobi Train View Post
    :rofl: That was my pervy post for the day, no offence intended, ladies. ^_^

    Yeah, I do that too, I always read it at least once after posting, and that's after reading in several times before posting. I always seem to find something I missed too. I'm not sure what to tell ya' then...though it didn't seem to be happening so much with your original story except in a few places.
    You mean my first story, the SSB one, or the Mutations OF?
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Sorry, I have to do this...

    I like big posts and I cannot lie,
    You other cats can't deny,
    When the OP walks in,
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    You know ya' gotta' read it all.

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    Quote Originally Posted by chakrawizard555 View Post
    You mean my first story, the SSB one, or the Mutations OF?
    Ah, I don't think I've read your first story at all.
     
         
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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    S.Train, you have a lot of reading to do.
     
         

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    Re: Voting: Best FanFiction [November 2012]

    Quote Originally Posted by Netsui View Post
    S.Train, you have a lot of reading to do.
    So it would seem...

    Has anyone ever seen "First Knight"? It's awesome, and Sean Connery's role is just perfect. The only thing I would have preferred is a better ending and it never really said who the next king would be exactly...though I think you're supposed to assume who it is.
     
         

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