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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Roshida Mode (Roshida Mode)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 3o Per Turn of Use
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites their thumbs, and marks their eyelids in blood. During the users next turn, the blood drips from their eyes to their
    jaw line, and the user begins to grow colored feathers, as well as feathers of a different color around their neck. The c
    olor of these feathers vary from person to person. Their eyes become small and black, similar to that of a hummingbird.
    ~Cannot be used unless:
    • The user has not used any summons during this battle.
    • The user has signed the hummingbird contract.
    • The user has used no jutsu during the turn of use.
    • The user has not used taijutsu before or after use. The use of taijutsu forces the user to exit Rashido Mode, and renders them unable to enter it again during the same battle.

    ~The user can exit Rashido mode at any time.
    ~Rashido mode can only be entered twice per battle.
    ~Roshida mode can only be used for a total of ten turns per battle during both uses, and counts as a jutsu each turn of use.
    ~Kekkei Genkai cannot be used during Roshida mode.

    Declined. Strengths? Drawbacks? Regarding your 10 turns between the two usages, Absolutely not, because that means one usage can last 10 turns if you dont have a second.

    Roshida Needles (Roshida Senbon)
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 3o
    Damage Points: 6o
    Description: The user shoots a large amount of senbon-like feathers from their mouth, arms, or legs. These can be aimed at a specific point on the target or shot at them randomly.
    ~Can be used by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

    ~Approved~


    Roshida Claw (Roshida Tsume)
    Type: Supplementary\Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 3o
    Damage Points: 6o
    Description: The user focuses chakra in their hand, and creates a claw-like form out of pure chakra that is capable of piercing through human flesh.
    ~Can be used by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

    ~Approved~

    Roshida Cloud (Roshida Kumo)
    Type: Supplementary\Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 3o
    Damage Points: 6o
    Description: The user uses their feathers to create a cloud-like buildup of feathers beneath their feet that can be used as a stepping stone.
    ~Can be used only by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

    Declined. how are the feathers staying up? you would just push them down.

    Earth Release: Roshida Stone (Roshida Tsume)
    Type: Supplementary\Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 3o
    Damage Points: 6o
    Description: The user channels chakra into an object and turns that object into a strong grey-colored stone. If the target is a living being, only their arms legs and, if possible, tail can be turned to stone. In this case, the user must make direct contact with that limb, or make contact with an object connected to that limb, such as turning a persons leg to stone by touching the ground they are standing on. If the target is touching an object that the object the user is touching is touching, this cannot be used. I.e. Standing on a pole connected to the ground the user is standing on.
    ~Usable thrice per battle.
    ~Can be used only by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

    Declined. Do not resubmit
     
         
    Last edited by Scary Yamato; 08-31-2011 at 02:43 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by KeotsuEclipse View Post
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: This technique utilizes the numerous swords involved in the use of the Infinite One-Sword Style and both the user's skill and speed as a ninja. The user attacks the opponent a total of eleven times in rapid succession, each at different angles and positions. With each strike the sword is left behind attached to the opponent. He then lands the final blow, making a total of twelve devastating blows. This technique pins and hurts the opponent. The reason why the swords can be powerful and stay on the opponent is because the blunt of the blade is used. The attack itself relies upon the high speeds of the individual attacks and the momentary stun inflicted by the previous blows, allowing the user to grab one of the surrounding swords and continue with the technique. This attack when used and if added with multiplication will put a great strain on the user making him or her dizzy and very exhausted. This is a finishing combo and is to knock out the opponent.
    Note: Only musasibou can teach this.
    Note: Can only use twice per battle.
    Note: The user cannot use this technique again for 3 turns.
    Note: The user can only perform two attacks this turn, this is included to that tally.
    Note: User can only use 2 moves next turn.
    Note: User can not use genjutsu or taijutsu for 1 turn.
    Note: This can be blocked to minimize damage. (-10)
    The technique is from 3:20 to 3:40.
    YouTube - Amv Black Star vs Mifune




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    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 100
    Description: This technique utilizes the numerous swords involved in the use of the Infinite One-Sword Style and both the user's skill and speed as a swordsman. The user attacks the opponent a total of eleven times in rapid succession, each at different angles and positions, each time leaving a blade behind, attached to their opponent. They then land the final blow, making a total of twelve devastating blows. This powerful technique both stuns and damages the opponent. The reason the blades from this technique can stay behind on the opponent is because the blunt side of the blade is used. The attack itself relies on the user’s high speed and strength, the attack happening at a pace comparable to the user releasing the Gate of Life, as well as the momentary stun caused by each blow to allow the user to grab another sword and continue on with the technique. When used alongside Multiplication, this technique makes the user extremely dizzy and exhausted. This is primarily a finishing combo, used to knock out the opponent.
    *Only Musashibou, Akiza, and KeotsuEclipse can teach this.
    *Can only be used twice per battle.
    *This attack can only be done if the Infinite One-Sword Style set-up has been used.
    *The user cannot use this technique again for three turns.
    *The user can only perform two attacks in the turn this is used, this technique included into that tally.
    *The user can only use two techniques in the next turn.
    *The user cannot use Genjutsu or Taijutsu for one turn.
    *This can be blocked to reduce the damage done by 10.
    This technique can be seen between 3:06 and 3:25 of this video.
    The Rhythm of Mifune (a soul eater amv)





    ~Declined~ And how do you reach 3rd gate speed without actually opening the gates? 3rd gate aint happening. And forbidden rank jutsus are supposed to damage the user.
    Changed name to reflect the move's real name, increased damage by 10 in order to maintain a 2:1 Damage:Chakra ratio, minor rewriting of the description to better suit my fighting style, and the mention that this move happens at 3rd Gate speeds. In a battle between Akiza and Lord Danzo (while he was in possession of a Tailed-Beast biography), Akiza used this move against Lord Danzo. Due to confusion, Akiza, Lord Danzo, myself, and Ragnaroc all conversed over MSN and concluded that the attack happens at the previously mentioned speed due to the way it works. I have no photographic proof of this, but Akiza and myself have stated that verdict every time after that battle, when the move has been used. Lord Danzo also says he recalls the conversation as well. I also replaced the amv, and updated who could teach it.

    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 100 (50 to the user)
    Description: This is a stronger version of the "Addition" technique of the Infinite One-Sword Style. The user attacks the opponent with another 12 strikes with a weaker damage slash to keep them stunned. While the opponent is still impaled by the previous twelve strikes, the user attacks once again, striking these remaining swords so as to repeat the succession of movements preformed previously. This results in doubling the attack damage that was already done, as it cuts his opponent with the twelve swords all over again. This totals up to twenty-four strikes being recieved by the enemy within an incredibly short period, leaving little to no chance for a counter attack. This attack causes damage to both the user and the opponent since this uses chakra and body speed/power to repeat the action it puts a immense strain on the users body. The user will be sluggish and be unable to do anything next turn.
    Note: Only musasibou can teach this.
    Note: Can only use once per battle.
    Note: This technique can only be done if Kendo: Infinite One-Sword Style is set up.
    Note: The damage from this can not be blocked.
    The technique is from 3:40 to 3:58.
    YouTube - Amv Black Star vs Mifune




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    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 150 (50 to user)
    Description: This is a stronger version of the “Addition” attack in the Infinite One-Sword Style. The user attacks the opponent with a weaker series of twelve slashes, in order to keep them stunned. When the opponent is shocked from the previous twelve strikes the user attacks once again, striking the surrounding swords so as to repeat the sequence of movements made previously. This results in doubling the attack damage that was already done, as it cuts his opponent with the twelve swords all over again. This totals up to twenty-four strikes being received by the enemy within an incredibly short period, leaving little to no chance for a counter attack. This move also damages the user as well as the opponent, as it takes chakra to augment the user’s body in addition to already high natural speed and power, the attack occurring at a speed comparable to the user having the Gate of Pain open, and due to this, this technique puts a tremendous strain on the user’s body. The user will be sluggish and unable to do anything next turn.
    *Only Musashibou, Akiza, and KeotsuEclipse can teach this.
    *Can only be used once per battle.
    *This attack can only be done if the Infinite One-Sword Style set-up has been used.
    *The damage from this cannot be blocked.
    This technique can be seen between 3:06 and 3:36 of this video.
    The Rhythm of Mifune (a soul eater amv)




    ~Declined~ Same reason as for the one above (minus the damage part)

    Changed the name to reflect the move's real name, updated the amv, reworded the jutsu to reflect my writing style, updated who could teach it, increased damage to 150 due to being a "step-up" from Addition, and due to it's restrictions being incredibly strict. I also included the fact that this jutsu occurs at 4th Gate Speeds, citing the reason mentioned in Addition's explanation - I increased the speed of this jutsu by one Gate due to it's much stricter drawbacks of use - however, if it needs to be reduced to 3rd gate like Addition to be approved, I will do so.

    Anything I haven't noted means it remained the same between versions, which could be seen by comparing them - however, I tried to cover all the differences, to make it easier.
    Resubmitting:


    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 100 (-25 to user)
    Description: This technique utilizes the numerous swords involved in the use of the Infinite One-Sword Style and both the user's skill and speed as a swordsman. The user attacks the opponent a total of eleven times in rapid succession, each at different angles and positions, each time leaving a blade behind, attached to their opponent. They then land the final blow, making a total of twelve devastating blows. This powerful technique both stuns and damages the opponent. The reason the blades from this technique can stay behind on the opponent is because the blunt side of the blade is used. The attack itself relies on the user’s high speed and strength, the attack happening at 2x the user's normal speed, due to the chakra for this technique being used to forcefully augment the user's muscles, as well as the momentary stun caused by each blow to allow the user to grab another sword and continue on with the technique. When used alongside Multiplication, this technique makes the user extremely dizzy and exhausted. This is primarily a finishing combo, used to knock out the opponent.
    *Only Musashibou, Akiza, and KeotsuEclipse can teach this.
    *Can only be used twice per battle.
    *This attack can only be done if the Infinite One-Sword Style set-up has been used.
    *The user cannot use this technique again for three turns.
    *The user can only perform two attacks in the turn this is used, this technique included into that tally.
    *The user can only use two techniques in the next turn.
    *The user cannot use Genjutsu or Taijutsu for one turn.
    *This can be blocked to reduce the damage done by 10.
    This technique can be seen between 3:06 and 3:25 of this video.
    The Rhythm of Mifune (a soul eater amv)




    Changed Gate part to just a general speed boost. I also added the self-damaging aspect - my apologies, I actually overlooked that on this justu.

    Declined. Regardless of how you say it, you are still mimicing the gates



    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 150 (50 to user)
    Description: This is a stronger version of the “Addition” attack in the Infinite One-Sword Style. The user attacks the opponent with a weaker series of twelve slashes, in order to keep them stunned. When the opponent is shocked from the previous twelve strikes the user attacks once again, striking the surrounding swords so as to repeat the sequence of movements made previously. This results in doubling the attack damage that was already done, as it cuts his opponent with the twelve swords all over again. This totals up to twenty-four strikes being received by the enemy within an incredibly short period, leaving little to no chance for a counter attack. This move also damages the user as well as the opponent, as it takes chakra to augment the user’s body in addition to already high natural speed and power, the attack occurring at 3x the user's natural speed, by augmenting the body's muscles forcefully with the chakra used in this technique, and due to this, this technique puts a tremendous strain on the user’s body. The user will be sluggish and unable to do anything next turn.
    *Only Musashibou, Akiza, and KeotsuEclipse can teach this.
    *Can only be used once per battle.
    *This attack can only be done if the Infinite One-Sword Style set-up has been used.
    *The damage from this cannot be blocked.
    This technique can be seen between 3:06 and 3:36 of this video.
    The Rhythm of Mifune (a soul eater amv)




    Again, changed it to a general speed boost, and removed the Gate speed.

    Declined. Same reason as above


    Updates:

    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will grab two katanas and rush the opponent at high speeds. He will then use his chakra to slash and before it makes contact the sword seems to split into two. Making the opponent very confused and distracted from the real attack which is actually the other sword. The target is then slash horizontally and then stabbed in the chest with the next sword. This is possible with genjutsu making the swordsman be able to trick the opponent at critical times to get the upper hand. The target will become confused and distracted enough to be slashed by the other sword and then with good timing the swordsman can then stab the opponent for the finishing blow. This requires high genjutsu skill and swordsman skill to execute and can be done from left handed or right handed sides.
    Note: Only Musasibou can teach this.
    Note: Does not require Infinite One-Sword Style Setup.
    Note: Can't be performed with another Infinite One-Sword Style attack other than the setup.
    Note: Must have 2 swords available.
    Note: can be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: User can't use genjutsu next turn.




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    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will grab two katana and then rush at the opponent at high speeds. Using their chakra, as the user slashes at the opponent, they will cast a Genjutsu which makes it appear as if the user’s sword split into two blades as it approaches, confusing the opponent, and leaving them open for the real attack, which is the other blade. Using the other sword, the user very quickly strikes them across the chest with a horizontal strike, and then proceeds to stab them in the chest with their sword in a finishing blow. Done with Genjutsu, this technique allows the user to trick the opponent at critical times in order to gain the upper hand. This technique requires both high level Genjutsu and Kenjutsu skills to perform, and can be preformed from either the left-hand or right-hand side.
    *Only Musashibou, Akiza, and KeotsuEclipse can teach this.
    *Does not require the Infinite One-Sword Style set-up to have been used.
    *Requires two swords to use.
    *Can be used three times per battle.
    *The user cannot use Genjutsu in the next turn.



    Changed name and slightly reworded the description, taking out a repetitive part, and making it more fight my writing style; updated who could teach it. Removed restriction that it couldn't be used with any other IO technique in the same turn, due to it being able to be use either pre/post set-up.

    ~Approved~


    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will be using one katana for this technique, and doesn't need the Infinite One-Sword Style Setup to execute this move. The User will grip tightly on his katana's hilt and focus chakra towards the soles of his feet. This will gater enough force to build up for a burst of speed using wind chakra. This user will take the nessecary stance and unleash the wind chakra to gain a burst of speed towards the direction he or she is facing compared to the speed of lee's 2nd gate. User will then aim to slash at the opponent at general areas since this attack is so hard to control and is inaccurate for striking vitals. While traveling towards the target there will be a trail of wind behind the user following him or her for the 2nd part of the attack. The user will slice the opponent and then the gale behind the user will blow the opponent away from short to mid range. The slice does all the damage and the gale is for protection and does no damage. The gale is in case something goes wrong since this is such a abrupt attack. This attack is strong, but not fatal since it's inaccurate to kill someone. This is to purely damage a limb or dewind the opponent. On another note due to the heavy abrupt force behind the user since wind is used to make him burst towards the opponent the user will sustain muscle damage. The force is too strong to do multiple times without a consequence and the body will show signs of damage. He or she will have a harder time with wind jutsu [ all reduced by one rank ] since he used a lot of chakra at the time.
    Note: Only Musa can teach.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: All wind effects after the attack is gone, you can't keep the speed boost nor can you use this to shoot yourself into the air.
    Note: User must be on the ground and must be in stance.
    Note: User will be unable to perform another Infinite One-Sword style technique next turn.
    Note: You can't use this to dodge an attack.
    Note: Opponent will be blown back, hit or miss, from short to mid range. No Damage.
    Note: User will sustain 25 damage from the abrupt burst of speed.
    Note: The second time the user uses this jutsu will be reduced to the speed of walking only. This skill is dangerous.




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    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: 150 (-50 to user)
    Description: The user will use only one katana from this technique, and thus it does not require the Infinite One-Sword Style set-up to have been used. The user will tightly grip their sword and focus chakra into the soles of their feet, gathering up a tremendous force for a burst of speed, using their Fuuton chakra. Taking the necessary stance, the user will release the wind chakra as they bolt forward, gaining a tremendous bolt of speed, moving at about 5x there previous speed. As they are moving, the user will swing their sword forward as the Fuuton chakra coats their body, creating a large movement of slicing wind due to the sheer speed that the air is being displaced by the user’s body and sword. While moving towards the opponent, this trail of wind created is the second part of the attack – the user will slice the opponent and the gale following will blow the opponent away from short to mid range. The strike from the sword does the majority of the damage, with the gale doing relatively little, being mainly for protection. The gale is a sort of countermeasure for anomalies, due to the abrupt nature of this attack. Due to the heavy force of the attack, from the tremendous output from the user’s muscles and the tailwind boosting their speed, the user suffers a sort of backlash and their body is damaged from the use of this technique – using this attack more than once causes intense strain on the body, almost preventing the user from being able to stand. After using this technique, the user’s Fuuton jutsu will be weakened in power by an equivalent of one rank, for three turns.
    *Only Musashibou, Akiza, and KeotsuEclipse can teach this.
    *Can only be used twice per battle.
    *All the effects from the Fuuton chakra vanish after this technique is completed - the boost of speed is not kept, and neither can this attack be used to launch yourself vertically into the air, as it requires the user to form the stance on the ground to launch themselves forward.
    *No Infinite One-Sword Style techniques can be used in the next turn.
    *This technique cannot be used to out-right avoid an attack.
    *After using this technique for a second time, the user’s muscles will be so heavily damaged that they will not be able to move any faster than a regular walk.




    Increased rank to Forbidden due to self-damaging nature, increased damage and chakra accordingly, changed name, and mentioned that it increased speed to 5x, since it was actually approved with a Gate's comparison. Removed "non-precise" nature and made it more akin to an actual attack, as a sword covered in Fuuton chakra at that speed would do more damage than it was treated in the previous version.

    Declined. same reason as "addition" and "multiplication"



    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Type: Supplementary
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Mifune, while using the Infinite One-Sword Style discovered a way to use what little chakra Samurai have to create a fearsome attack. By focusing chakra into the blade, the user can swing their blade and knock surrounding blades into the air – by doing this they are transferring some of that chakra into those blades, and which allows the user to manipulate the blades in the air. This allows the user to control the blades as needed, though they form a spinning dome around the user when idle, creating a powerful offense and defense. This move is similar to the Shinobi move Soushuuha, but is in itself quite different and very useful for a Samurai.
    *Note: Must have the Kendo: Infinite One-Sword Style active.
    *Note: Usable only by Musashibo, Akiza, and KeotsuEclipse.
    *Note: Only Musashibo is allowed to teach this move.
    *Note: Only usable twice per battle.
    *Note: Up to fifteen swords can be put into the air.
    *Note: May not be used again for three turns after first activation.
    *Note: The swords in this technique may be used to activate other Kendo: Infinite One-Sword Style techniques, which may result in the move being slightly different due to variants.
    Mifune using Disorderly Line in the air




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    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: A powerful Infinite One-Sword Style technique, this technique involves the user focusing chakra into their blade and striking the surrounding blades, transferring some chakra to the surrounding blades, causing them to be launched up into the air, allowing the user to manipulate the blades as they wish. This allows the user to control the blades as needed, though they form a spinning dome around the user when idle, creating a powerful offense and defense. This move is similar to the move Soushuuha, but is in itself quite different and can be used bySamurai.
    *Must have the Infinite One-Sword Style already set up.
    *Only useable/teachable by Musashibou, Akiza, and KeotsuEclipse.
    *Only useable twice per battle.
    *Up to fifteen swords can be put into the air.
    *May not be used again for three turns after first activation.
    *The swords in this technique can be used in other Infinite One-Sword Style techniques, which may result in the move being slightly different due to variants.
    Mifune using Disorderly Line in the air.




    Changed name, removed character reference.

    ~Approved~
     
         
    Last edited by Scary Yamato; 08-31-2011 at 03:05 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kōton: rippoutai) steel release: cube
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementry
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: /
    Description: the user tosses a large steel cube over there opponent then you can use a four pillar or sixteen pillar to turn the cube into a large oven
    -can only be used by a steel bio
    - can only be taught by heavens blade

    Declined. Give a better description of how the cube is formed and how large it is.

    (Kōton: metaru sadou) steel release: metal movement
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementry
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: /
    Description: the user is able to move through metal object at very high speeds can be used to dodge attacks of gain tactical advantage over opponent
    -can only be used by steel bio
    -can only travel through steel that is connected
    -can only be taught by heavens blade

    Declined. Needs usage restrictions


    (Kōton: Kōsame) steel release: steel shark
    Rank: A
    Type: Offence
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: the user does three handseals then places there hand on the ground and makes a shark out of steel which travels under ground will then comes out of he ground and devours the opponent the shark moves at the same speed as water shark bomb
    -shark travels 2 times faster if steel field is in play
    -can only be used by steel bios
    -can only be taught by heavens blade

    ~Appoved~


    (doton: shiroari) earth release: termites
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: the user makes 5 handseals then makes a dozen termites made of earth the termites are larger then normal (the termites are the size of deidara clay spiders) the termites can eat through anything of a lower density
    -can only be used twice
    -can only be taught by heavens blade

    Declined. Do not resubmit


    (suiton: hitoshirenu heki) water release: useen tears
    Rank: B
    Type: Attack
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: the user gathers suiton chakra into there hand making water droplets on there fingertips then flicks his/her wrist flinging the droplets at his/her opponent just before the water leaves his/her hand s/he condenses the droplets till there hard enough to pierce the skin (when the water leaves the finger tips it takes the shape of a tear drop)
    -can only be taught by heavens blade

    ~Approved~


    link to my finished steel training
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=89958
     
         
    Last edited by Scary Yamato; 08-31-2011 at 03:17 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Gin-San View Post
    (Sakin: Kin raikou ridairekushon) Gold Dust: Gold Lightning Redirection
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A (Depends on the attack of the user)
    Description: The user will use gold dust to create a receptor infront of him in the shape of an arc pointing the opponent. Any type of lightning attack (non focused or focused) will be directed to the in one of the ends of the arc, and redirected towards the opponent in the form of a focused blast from the other end. This cannot defend agaisnt Kirin.
    Restrinctions:
    - Can only be used by a fourth Kazekage bio
    - Can only redirect lightning S-rank and below up to 2 times.
    - Can only redirect Forbidden and strong lightning combos that exceed above a forbidden attack one time
    - No magnetism based attacks next turn
    - This jutsu counts as two moves
    - No other gold dust techniques in the same turn
    - Can only be used once every 2 turns


    ~Declined~ OP

    (Sakin: Sakin nohara) Gold Dust: Gold dust field
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40 (-10 per turn while activated)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: After 5 handseals the user will slam his hands on the ground, elevating large amount gold dust particles in the surface from underneath the ground, creating a thin layer of gold dust in all ranges for incoming gold dust jutsus. Gold dust related techniques speed up because the dust is already in the battlefield.
    Restrinctions:
    - Can stay for the whole battle
    -Can only be used one time
    - User cannot use S-rank and above elemental techniques while this is active
    -Can only be used by 4th Kazekage bios


    ~Approved~ however removed the last sentence, if it's just a thin layer of gold dust, why would it be harder to run? Its weight doesn't really have much to do with that.

    (Sakin: Sakin Bunshin) Gold Dust: Gold dust clone
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra Points: 25 (+10 to reform)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a clone made of gold dust. The clones can catch objects or attacking shinobi within themselves and trap them. If the clone is dispersed by the user or by a strong attack, the clone will puff into a cloud of gold dust, magnetising anything within short range of the cloud and covering it with gold dust.
    Note: Clone costs 10 chakra to reappear again.


    ~Declined~ someone a few posts back posted a Gold Clone, even though not yet approved he was first.


    (Jiton: magunechikku gekitai) Magnetism release: Magnetic repulse
    type: Defense
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user after being magnetized by the opponent, will create a magnetic field around his own body with the same charge/polarity. By doing this, the similar charges/polarities will repel each other, and the user will stop being a giant magnet.
    -Can only be used 5 times per battle
    -Can only be used by magnetism users


    ~Approved~

    (Sakin: Bakufu tomurai) - Gold Dust Funeral
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: Once the target or any other object is covered in gold dust, the user clenches his fist, making the gold dust compact itself, crushing whatever was covered within the gold dust.
    - 3 Times per battle
    -Not S rank gold dust techniques next turn
    - once every two turns
    - fourth kazekage only


    I have to say I was the first to post gold dust clones before Loki,
    this said I hope my clones do not get disapproved because Loki's where declined for later, because he edited his post to add them after my post.

    ~Declined, do not resubmit~ this is just a copy of Gaara's sand jutsu
    (Sakin: Kin raikou ridairekushon) Gold Dust: Gold Lightning Redirection
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40 (+15 if the user decides to make the attack stronger)
    Damage Points: N/A (Depends on the attack of the user, +10 if the attack becomes stronger)
    Description: The user will use gold dust to create a receptor infront of him in the shape of an arc pointing the opponent. Any type of focused or non-focused lightning attack A rank and below will be directed to one of the ends of the arc, and redirected towards the opponent in the form of a focused blast from the other end. The user can add more chakra into it, making the comeback a bit stronger
    Restrinctions:
    - Can only be used by a fourth Kazekage bio
    - Can only redirect lightning A-rank and below up to 2 times.
    - No magnetism based attacks next turn
    - No other gold dust techniques in the same turn
    - Can only be used once every 2 turns


    Declined. How is your gold dust supposed to re-direct the lightning? I know gold is a receptor of electicity but its not like the cartoons where they hold up a U-pipe and the cannonball gets shot back at the cannon.
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    (Raiton: juu touken za keigoku)-:Lightning release: Ten Swords of Punishment
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will concentrate his lightning chakra into the air. The chakra will travel to the opponent and will surround him (As fast as lightning travels, this will take less than a second). After the lightning surrounds the opponent, the lightning will shape into ten swords, 1.4 meters long each, covering a 360 degree area (the swords are 3 meters away from the opponent, meaning that there is 4.4 meters between the opponent and a sword). The altitude of the swords is approximately the mid-body of the opponent. The swords will start to rotate at mid speeds (you can still define each blade, like a fan going in low but slower), and then all of them in a single second all of them will stop and will be attracted to the target in the center of them, impaling the target. The blades will follow the opponent until the blades stop moving to attack the target.
    Restrinctions:
    -Only usable 2 times
    -No other lightning jutsu in this turn, as all the lightning chakra is concentrated in the blades
    -No higher than A-rank lightning next turn
    -Must have mastered raiton
    -Only Sannin and above can use this jutsu, as it requires enough experience to control the flow of the swords
    -The user was to keep visual contact with the enemy all the time, by failing to do so, the blades will not be able to rotate appropriately and will disperse into their natural lightning chakra, which could harm the opponent as a C-rank
    -If the opponent touches one of the blades (which could be possible if he moves at a faster pace than the swords following him) the user will be discharged with A-rank power lightning


    Declined. Since you mention that the blades rotate around the opponent for a period of time you either need to detail how long that period is or state that it's at your descretion


    (No English translation) Gold dust: Pistolero
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Range dependent of the user's field of vision.
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user point both index fingers (with the pulgars pointing up) from both hands in the opponent's location (the hands will shape pistols).
    By pulling his hand backwards, the user shots a bullet made of gold dust. The user can continue this action and he will keep shooting bullets until the user stops. The bullets have a caliber close to .32 and will rotate within themselves to produce a much stronger penetrative force. The speed of the bullets are comparable with Bee throwing a lightning influenced pencil.
    -the user is unable to move while aiming
    -The recoil and distance greatly affect the accuracy of the shots. If the user shots consecutive bullets within each other with less of a second span, the bullets will not be as effective. If the user waits between 1-2 seconds for his next shot, the bullets will follow almost the exact same direction of the previous one; each hand is independent of each other. If the opponent is within long range, the accuracy will not be as expected, between 3 of 5 bullets would have a chance to hit. Mid-range has a 4 to 5 to hit.
    -Usable 3 times per battle
    -After 10 bullets shot, the user has to wait 5 seconds for the next row (As if he was reloading or cooling down)
    -Only Yondaime Kazekage bios


    Declined. Limit the total number of bullets.


    (Sakin: Go-ruden Kusari)- Gold dust: Golden Chains
    Range: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will create a small crater in the ground, and will transfer would dust in it. Then the gold dust will travel towards the opponent, collecting more gold dust from the earth particles. The gold dust travels as fast as a person using hiding like a mole. The gold dust will elevate from the ground directly (or slightly behind) the user feet. The gold dust will immediately bind the enemy's feet, and will in an increase surround the the target until covering the whole body, leaving the head out. Covering the whole body occurs within seconds. If the opponent is standing in gold dust before, it is useless to perform the previous activities (such as doing the crater)
    -Usable 2 times per battle
    -Only Yondaime Kazekage bios


    ~Approved~


    (Jiton: Atorakuta)- Magnetic Release: Attractor
    Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: The user will pin point any location in the arena with his index finger (as his field of vision can allow).Sending magnetic chakra into that certain location. The site will become extremely magnetic. Any magnetic properties (metal for example) will be attracted and stuck in a sphere-like object. The user cannot attract an enemy (even if the enemy is magnetized, it wont work).
    -Usable once per battle
    -No other magnetism related techniques in the same turn
    -Only Magnetism Users


    Declined. Please state the range that an object needs to be from the magnetized location in order to be attracted to the obejct. How big of an object can the magnetized source attract? I like this jutsu. its extrememly usefull, but there are some holes that need to be filled in.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Katon: Mizumizushii Tenji no Honō no Jutsu) - Fire Release: Vibrant Show of Flame Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will expunge a powerful blast of fire from their mouth, capable of large scale devastation. This Technique works well in conjunction to Water Release: Spirited Mist Technique to create a scolding wave of water that scorches the area.

    (Suiton: Kieikiri no Jutsu) - Water Release: Spirited Mist Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user first uses the snake hand seal and then Gathering chakra in his mouth, the user will spray a thick mist outward that will cover the area. The mist is laced with Water-natured chakra, allowing it to soak up most Fire-natured attacks. It has shown to be vulnerable to Lightning-natured attacks, turning the entire area where it engulfs into a natural conductor. This technique can be used in conjunction with the Fire Release: Vibrant Show of Flame Technique to create a scolding wave of water that scorches the area.

    ~Both Declined~Restriction needed

    (Doton: Tsuka no Tsuchi Souzou Jutsu) - Earth Release: Earth Mound Creation Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The earth is caused to rise up at least 10 feet and a steep sloped mound is made with the shinobi performing this jutsu at its peak. The mound soaks up water like a sponge making this an effective jutsu to perform when fighting any water using shinobi.

    ~Declined~ Add a restriction and include how much water it can soak up.

    Resubmitting:-
    (Katon: Mizumizushii Tenji no Honō no Jutsu) - Fire Release: Vibrant Show of Flame Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will expunge a powerful blast of fire from their mouth, capable of large scale devastation. This Technique works well in conjunction to Water Release: Spirited Mist Technique to create a scolding wave of water that scorches the area.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per match

    Declined. What does "large scale devastation" translate to as far as area coverage? to me it means you would probably be caught in the blast also due to how larg it is so please be a little more specific.

    (Suiton: Kieikiri no Jutsu) - Water Release: Spirited Mist Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user first uses the snake hand seal and then Gathering chakra in his mouth, the user will spray a thick mist outward that will cover the area. The mist is laced with Water-natured chakra, allowing it to soak up most Fire-natured attacks. It has shown to be vulnerable to Lightning-natured attacks, turning the entire area where it engulfs into a natural conductor. This technique can be used in conjunction with the Fire Release: Vibrant Show of Flame Technique to create a scolding wave of water that scorches the area.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per match

    Declined. (this note applies to the one above it also.) How do you make a scalding wave of water from mist? it doesnt seem like you would have enough water. Also, does the fire dissapear after heating the mist? just add a little more explination.

    (Doton: Tsuka no Tsuchi Souzou Jutsu) - Earth Release: Earth Mound Creation Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The earth is caused to rise up at least 10 feet and a steep sloped mound is made with the shinobi performing this jutsu at its peak. The mound soaks up water like a sponge making this an effective jutsu to perform when fighting any water using shinobi.
    Note: Can only absorb up to S rank and absorb one technique per useage of the technique and can only be used 3 times with two turns before being used again.


    Declined. when you say this soaks up water like a sponge it makes me think that If I spit out a lakes forth of water that this technique will soak it up. Is that what it does? All A-ranked earth barriers should be able to block S-ranked water so I fail to see what special purpose this serves. please give more detail as to what this jutsu does.

    Quote Originally Posted by Iwabi View Post
    [I]
    (Kotoshironushi no Kami no Jutsu) - Oracular Pronouncements Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will cast a genjutsu over their opponent in which in the moment they go to use their technique they cause the illusion to think that they have used the technique and it directly hits their enemy and thus in reality causes them to simply cancel the technique and as soon as that happens they automatically break out the genjutsu and realise they failed in their attack.
    Note: Can only be used every two turns.

    ~Declined~ Reword it a bit, it's a little hard to understand. I understood, but it's still hard to understand it.

    Reworded as per requested hopefully this makes it more understandable and i have also added extra restriction.

    (Kotoshironushi no Kami no Jutsu) - Oracular Pronouncements Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This Genjutsu is unique in its useage that the user will cast the technique upon the target the moment they make a technique. The initial genjutsu itself causes the user to believe they have successfully completed their attack as they watch the technique strike their opponent. However this is not the case in the real realm as the use cancels the real technique and thus also breaks them out of the genjutsu and then realisation soon strikes as they see the caster of the genjutsu is unharmed. The technique itself is merely a method to force the enemy to cancel their technique and sparing the user from harm.(This technique can only be countered if the target themselves has occular powers and can see the change in their chakra.)
    Note: No Genjutsu techniques the following turn.
    Note: Can only be used every two turns.

    Declined. Needs a restriction of total uses. Also, I get your concept but try to switch up explination, because if a person fires a jutsu they dont need to "cancel" it after it hits. It either hits or it doesnt.

    New Technique:-

    (Mugen: Kagami Gazō no Jutsu) - Demonic Illusion: Mirror Image Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Once the genjutsu has been initiated the illusion traps the victim in a white empty room like space, once there a mirror will appear in front of the victim and then the victim looks at the reflection of his own image in the mirror, then suddenly the victim is then trapped inside the mirror. The user will then appear in this white room and with a snap of his finger the mirror will shatter pieces along with the victim. The victim will feel the sensation of their entire body being broken into hundreds of pieces, the purpose of this jutsu is to weaken a targets defense as well as to render their vision slightly so that they are unable to battle properly.
    Note: Can only use every two turns and no genjutsu useage the following turn.


    Declined. Either increase the duration before subsequent use or make a total number of uses.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Hakke Magenken: Primera no Kata | Eight Trigrams Demonic Illusion Fist: First Form
    Rank: C
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 15
    Damage points: 30
    Description: The user forms a circle with one of his hands, which will place the target in a Genjutsu where time will seem to slow down as the hand moves, to finally stop completely when the circle is complete. As time seems to become slower and slower, the target will gradually become unable to move his body, to finally become totally paralyzed as the circle becomes complete. As the target gets captured in the Genjutsu, the user will appear in front of the target and place his hand in front of the targets eyes, which will place him in another Genjutsu where the target feels the users presence behind him. As the target gets captured in the second Genjutsu, the user gathers chakra in two fingers and thrusts them into the targets eyes with great force.
    -Both illusions are E-ranked in strength.
    -Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Leeroy G. Zero
    Declined, this is clearly not a C rank technique
    Hakke Magenken: Primera no Kata | Eight Trigrams Demonic Illusion Fist: First Form
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user forms a circle with one of his hands, which will place the target in a Genjutsu where time will seem to slow down as the hand moves, to finally stop completely when the circle is complete. As time seems to become slower and slower, the target will gradually become unable to move his body, to finally become totally paralyzed as the circle becomes complete. It's important to notice that the opponent as the time to react accordingly as he notice the effect taking place. As the target gets captured in the Genjutsu, the user will appear in front of the target and place his hand in front of the targets eyes, which will place him in another Genjutsu where the target feels the users presence behind him. As the target gets captured in the second Genjutsu, the user gathers chakra in two fingers and thrusts them into the targets eyes with great force.
    -Both illusions are C-ranked in strength.
    -Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin


    (If there's any problem with the rank, please change it ^_^)

    ~Accepted: I've edited the ranks and added the bold part~

    Hakke Magenken: Segunda no Kata | Eight Trigrams Demonic Illusion Fist: Second Form
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user focuses wind chakra into his hands or weapon and gestures towards the target. The gesture places the target in a Genjutsu, where the target sees the user dashing towards him while performing several slashing motions with his hands or weapon, which causes several small blades of wind to seemingly shoot out from his hands or weapons and race towards the target. In reality, the user simply focuses chakra into their feet and vanishes in a blur of speed, after which he appears right in front of the target and stabs his weapon or hand into the targets abdomen. The stab is usually aimed at vital organs.
    -The illusion is C-ranked in strength.
    -Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin


    ~Approved: changed the rank and usages in the restrictions~


    Hakke Magenken: Tercera no Kata | Eight Trigrams Demonic Illusion Fist: Third Form
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user performs a simple hand gesture, which immediately places the target in a Genjutsu, where he will feel nothing but absolute terror, fear and dread. First, the target will see the users hand begin to glow ominously, after which, the users body will disappear into a complete darkness and only his two hands will remain visible. The users two hands will immediately seem to form a box with the thumb, index and middle finger of each hand and as soon as the box is complete a glowing red eye will appear in the middle of the box and quickly begin to multiply. The target will feel as if thousands of glowing red eyes are racing past him with high speed. The Genjutsu will manipulate the targets brain into ignoring any sense of survival-instinct, the only feelings the target will be able to feel is fear, paranoia, sadness and hopelessness. In reality, the user simply focuses chakra into his feet and earth chakra into his hands. The user will then disappears in a blur of speed; he quickly reappears behind the enemy and delivers a devastating dual palm thrust to his spine.
    -The illusion is B-ranked.
    -Can only be used 3 times per match.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.


    ~Declined: check the bold part. Also, work on the restrictions.~

    Hakke Magenken: Cuatro no Kata | Eight Trigrams Demonic Illusion Fist: Fourth Form
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user focuses wind chakra into his hands or into a weapon, this will causes the wind chakra to extend itself from the chosen object and thereby increase its range. The extended wind chakra is invisible to the naked eye. As the user focuses wind chakra, he performs a simple gesture with his hand or holds eye contact with the target, either one of these will cause the opponent to be trapped in a Genjutsu. Inside the Genjutsu, the target will see the user disappear in a blur of speed and feel his presence behind him a moment later, the feeling of having the user behind him will be extremely realistic and include both the smell, the sense of danger, etc. The second the target becomes captured in the Genjutsu, the user will dash towards him with incredible speed and perform two incredibly fast slashes with his weapon or hands. The attack will happen so fast that the body will take a few seconds to register the fatal damage. This technique is based on Asuma Sarutobi’s Hien (Flying Swallow)
    -The illusion is C-ranked.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin


    ~Declined: You're overextending your abilities. You're not using anything to boost your speed or strength~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Crow~ View Post

    Updating this:
    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: kaen) - Summoning Technique: Blaze
    Rank: S
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage:N/A (depending on the used technique)
    Description: Blaze is a large crow that is slighty smaller than Gamabunta, he has yellow feathers on his chest area which he was born with but it makes invulnerable to fire techniques from B-rank and below, he was taught the fire element up to the A-rank but for him to use techniques that require handseals the user must be on top of Blaze's head and makes the handseals required for the fire technique that blaze is going to use, just like any other giant crow , he can use his wings and concentrate chakra into them blasting wind techniques away , by doing so he can blast up to S-rank wind techniques and below away with his wings but it's counts as one of the three moves per turn
    - Can stay on the field for 5 turns
    - Can blast Wind techniques away only 3 times per battle
    - Must have signed the Crows contract
    - Can only be used by ~Crow~


    To this:

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Kaen no kasai Karasu) - Summoning Technique: Blaze The Legendary Fire Crow
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: N/A [-30 damage to the user when summoned]
    Description: The user bites his thumb and wipes blood over a tattoo placed on the back of his hand and slams his hands on the ground to call forth the legendary fire crow, the fire crow is the same size as Gamabunta,what makes him special than other crows is the manipulation of the fire affinity, from his birth he was training to master the fire element and becomes more accustomed to it, therefore he can use the fire element up to S-rank techniques without the use of handseals inorder to perform the fire techniques, he has thick feathers that makes him immune to fire techniques from A-rank and below,whenever this crow performs a fire technique it gets enhanced by +20 additional damage points due to him using more chakra in order to perform the fire technique required, being trained in the fire element from birth and being greatly accustomed to it, has the ability to transform himself completely in fire making fire surrounds all of his body while his body itself is turned into pure fire in order to be used in attacks or defence as well as increasing any fire technique he uses by +40 additional damage points and can fly in the air with a speed equivalent to the second gate but after this ability is used once he vanishes from the battlefield.
    - Stays on the field for 5 turns
    - the ability of turning completely into flames lasts for 1 turn.
    - Must have signed the crows contract
    - Can only be taught by ~Crow~
    Declined
    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Kaen no kasai Karasu) - Summoning Technique: Blaze The Legendary Fire Crow
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: N/A [-30 damage to the user when summoned]
    Description: The user bites his thumb and wipes blood over a tattoo placed on the back of his hand and slams his hands on the ground to call forth the legendary fire crow, the fire crow is the same size as Gamabunta,what makes him special than other crows is the manipulation of the fire affinity, from his birth he was training to master the fire element and becomes more accustomed to it, therefore he can use the fire element up to S-rank techniques without the use of handseals in order to perform the fire techniques, he has thick feathers that makes him immune to fire techniques from A-rank and below,whenever this crow performs a fire technique it gets enhanced by +10 additional damage points due to him using more chakra in order to perform the fire technique required, being trained in the fire element from birth and being greatly accustomed to it, has the ability to transform himself completely in fire making fire surrounds all of his body while his body itself is turned into pure fire in order to be used in attacks or defence as well as increasing any fire technique he uses by +30 additional damage points but after this ability is used once he vanishes from the battlefield.
    - Stays on the field for 5 turns
    - the ability of turning completely into flames lasts for 1 turn.
    - Must have signed the crows contract
    - Can only be taught by ~Crow~

    ~Declined: OP~


    (Meiton: zetsumei kousen) - Dark Release: Death Beam

    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 [+20 if absorbed a B-rank technique using inhaling maw beforehand]
    Description: The user gathers a large amount of dark chakra into both of his palms then he brings his hands in front of him while his palms are facing crossed angles as the user releases the dark chakra Into a small condensed black orb that looks the same as the tailed beast bomb through the usage of shape manipulation, then the user releases a large black beam that covers a wide area and thrusts at fast speeds in the desired location due to the high concentration of the black orb, the user can enhance the beam's power by using the energy absorbed through the usage of the inhaling maw technique beforehand which is a separate technique and must be done in the same turn that this technique is used in.
    - Can only be used 2 times per battle
    - No dark release techniques higher than A-rank for 2 turns after this turn.
    - Can only be taught by ~Crow~

    ~Approved: Edited the usage per match ~

    (Meiton: kurayami soujuu) - Dark Release: Darkness Manipulation
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user gathers a large amount of dark chakra into his hands and releases the dark chakra that was gathered through the battlefield causing any dark release technique to fall under the user's manipulation through his dark release chakra, he can shape the dark release technique into whichever shape he wants as well as changing it's direction.
    - Can only be used 3 times per battle
    - The user can manipulate dark release techniques only up to A-rank.
    - The user can't use dark release techniques higher than A-rank for 2 turns.
    - Can only be taught by ~Crow~

    ~Declined: I will not accept free "manipulation" or bending customs~

    (Meiton no jutsu) - Dark Release Technique
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defence
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user can make small dark release energy blasts , shields or any form he wishes to make through the usage of dark release although it's not a solid matter as it's substance is almost like the wind release.
    -Can only be used 5 times per match

    ~Approved: Added a restriction~

    (taibu meiton no jutsu) - Greater Dark Release Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/Defence/Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: This is a stronger version of the dark release technique, the user can shoot dark release energy blasts , shields or any kind of shape through the usage of the dark release but on a larger scale than the standard dark release technique.
    -Can only be used 3 times per match

    ~Approved: added a restriction~

    Dark release biography ---> ~Dante~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Shizen Kaminari no Kyōka) Natural Lightning Enhancment
    Rank: C-Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A (depends on jutsu)
    Chakra Cost: N/A (+10 to the new rank's chakra cost)
    Damage Points: +5 to the new rank's damage (+5 to user for C-S; +15 to user for Forbidden)
    Description: The user, after forming the handseals for a lightning release ninjutsu, will then add a final handseal (unique from the common 12) and raise their dominant hand to the sky. A bolt of natural lightning will come down from the heavens, landing in the user's palm, and increase the jutsu by one rank (changing the rank, chakra cost, and damage points accordingly). The jutsu is performed the moment the lightning strike reaches the user's hand.
    Note: ~If used on an A-rank and up jutsu, the user cannot use A-rank and above lightning jutsu in the same and next turns
    ~Cannot be used on a Forbidden-rank jutsu
    ~Cannot be used on a jutsu that causes lightning to strike (ie. Lightning Fang or Kirin)
    ~Can only be used by one of a members two bios
    ~Can only be used during stormy conditions
    ~Can only be used three times per battle
    ~Can only be used on an S-rank one time per battle
    ~Can only be taught by Sharingdork

    ~Declined: I like the fact that it's theatrical and all, but how do you plan on surviving getting hit by lightning? There's a difference between natural lightning and the one created with chakra, it was stated when Itacha fought with Sasuke. Right now, you're just electrocuting yourself. Also, I'd never allow this jutsu since it could boost S-rank to Forbidden and Forbidden to something higher.~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton: Hogo Kyōkai)-Water Style: Protection Perimeter (kinda lame name but I can't think of anything better for jutsu like this
    Type: Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User can infuse short-ranged water around him with his own chakra thus making it impossible for opponent to use that water for his jutsus.
    *Can be only taught by Kaziname
    *Jutsu lasts for 4 turns
    *Can be only used 2 times

    ~Approved: Cool idea, made it A-rank though~


    (Suiton: Appurippu!) - Water Style: Rip-up!
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: By using water chakra user will "rip-up" water molecules (H2O) and separate them thus seemingly "erasing" a body of water. After user separates them he has to keep them divided by coating them with chakra in order for them to not merge again into water. Since technique requires precision, substantial amount of chakra and a lot of concentration the body of water can't be too big or else the technique will fail (biggest amount of water user can "erase" is roughly the size of "Water Dragon Bullet").
    *Due to complexity of jutsu it can only be used twice
    *Can only be used by Kaziname

    ~Declined: Far-fetched (even though it's scientifically possible). Do not resubmit~

    (Suiton: Eakurīnā) - Water Style: Air Filter
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: By using water chakra user will make a small layer of water that covers his mouth and nostrils. These layers actually allow the user to breathe through moisture in the air (layers leave out the "H2" part of general water formula and only let in "O" - oxygen). Although such technique can allow the user to breathe underwater it was mainly created to protect the user from various dangerous gasses that he could potentially inhale while breathing through normal methods.
    *Can be only taught by Kaziname

    ~Declined: Already exist, I made a similar jutsu 2 weeks ago~

    (Raiton: Nō shigeki sōchi) - Lightning Style: Brain Stimulator
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Using similar mechanics as in "Lightning Armour" of 4th Raikage user can, by using lightning chakra, speed up all brain functions instead of body functions. Human eye picks-up around 300 fps which allows humans to see things as in slow motion. However, since brain has to process numerous tasks other than sight, it processes only around 30 fps. With use of this jutsu user's brain gains the ability to process all 300 fps.
    *Since jutsu requires extreme precision with lightning chakra user can't use any other lightning jutsus while this one is in effect
    *Can be only used by Kaziname
    *Can be only used once
    *Can be only used for a maximum of [2] turns (fill in the number if you think that "no lightning jutsus" isn't enough)

    ~Declined: No ocular power, or else we'll get flooded with Sharingan copycats~

    (Suiton: Umi no ō no Fīrudo) - Water Style: Field of Sea Kings
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: By distributing one's own suiton chakra around whole battlefield, user can enhance the forming speed of water jutsus two fold. Although jutsu is quite useful it is also a double-edged sword. Unfortunately jutsu was never fully completed thus jutsu works both ways - it enhances the forming speed of all water jutsus in the field (both user's and his opponent's).
    *Lasts for 4 turns
    *Can be only used once
    *Can be only used by Kaziname

    ~Declined: I like the idea, but I'm not sure I get the bold part. Make it clear and I'll approve~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    plz edit when it need to
    (Raiton:erekutorikku genkotsu mo-do) Lightning release:electric fists mode
    Rank: S rank
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range:short-long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 60(+if use it as a mode it gain 10 for every b rank raiton and 20 for a and s rank)(+10 if use a taijutsu jutsu with hands)
    Description:the user put huge amount of his raiton chakra at his fists that make him able to make one single hand seal for any hand seal even if it's 10 and this technique also can make a huge shield of lightning that can defend against him also if he touched anything it get shocked with hit and also he can release the chakra into the ground making the chakra go towards the opposite
    -lasts 8 turns if it's as a mode
    -can't use any katon or wind jutsu at the mode
    -if he use it as a regular jutsu it just last 2 turns
    -can't go in any other mode at the same turn he use this

    (Katon:itto douzen ato ha) fire release: it's just a leaf
    Rank: S rank
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range:mid
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 70
    Description:the user gather great amount of his katon chakra then he put it as his hand then he release it all into the form of a regular leaf then he let it and then he make a wind technique so by that he will push it towards the opposite and the opposite won't see it if it touched the opposite it will kill him directly and make huge exploasion
    -must use wind technique a b or s rank not lower
    -can't use any katon jutsu at the same turn
    - can't make any suiton jutsu at the smae turn
    -can't go into any mode at the same turn
    -must know how to control his katon chakra by some training on it like battle training

    ~Both Declined: The first one is especially OP and the second one needs a better explanation and description. In fact, both should need better description. Also, work on the restrictions of both jutsu (again, especially the first one)~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by -Mugen- View Post
    custom weapon

    (Kyousei-Katana no Netsu Seijin ) Great Sword of the Temperature Sage
    Rank: S
    Type: weapon
    Range:N/a
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: It is said this sword was once wielded by one of the family members of the Rokuddu Sage that possessed a ability to control temperature.Being constantly infused with that sages chakra,the sword actually inherited the ability.It is also said that the sword still has a small part of the Sages will left in it, so whenever someone who is not the weilder touches it, he get instantly ignited.The current and only weilder of this sword currently is Mugen who has the same ability as the Sage in the tales.(My CE)
    The sword like previously said has a ability to manipulate temperature to a certain point.So each turn,once, the user has the choice of almost instantly canceling any fire,water or earth jutsu by infusing either cold or hot temperature into the jutsu itself.(this is done by slashing or stabbing) the jutsu.This can also be used on a regular sword of the opponent if it is close combat.
    The sword looks like so


    ~Declined: OP~
    restricted it more,and decreased the elements it can be used on from 3 to 2 ^^

    (Kyousei-Katana no Netsu Seijin ) Great Sword of the Temperature Sage
    Rank: S
    Type: weapon
    Range:N/a
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: It is said this sword was once wielded by one of the family members of the Rokuddu Sage that possessed a ability to control temperature.Being constantly infused with that sages chakra,the sword actually inherited the ability.It is also said that the sword still has a small part of the Sages will left in it, so whenever someone who is not the weilder touches it, he get instantly ignited.The current and only weilder of this sword currently is Mugen who has the same ability as the Sage in the tales.(My CE)
    The sword like previously said has a ability to manipulate temperature to a certain point.So once every 3 turns(meaning 2 full turns are a cool down),once, the user has the choice of almost instantly canceling any water or earth jutsu by infusing either cold or hot temperature into the jutsu itself.(this is done by slashing or stabbing) the jutsu.This can also be used on a regular sword of the opponent if it is close combat.
    *The special ability costs 30 chakra
    The sword looks like so


    ~Declined: It's still OP. Check the bold part. And add restrictions at the end, not in the jutsu (just to make it clearer to your opponent)~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Izou Bure-dos) - Legacy Blades
    Rank: S rank
    Range: N/a
    Chakra Cost: -20 per turn
    Damage Points: 40 per hit
    Description: The legacy blades are twin swords that were forged together many years ago. This ancient blades were forged in Mount Myōboku in a sacred forge. These two swords were forged from the same piece of metal and were coated in the sacred oil of the toads. This oil was polished into the blades with a sacred method known only to the toads, then a the blades would under go another special forging methods. The oil was poloshed into the blades as they are ment for sage mode users. These blades have the power to draw in sage chakra which can then be absorbed by the user of the blades. This is slower than when the user draws in natural energy by themselves, about half the speed, but it's meant for when the user is unable to remain still.
    The 2 blades each have special abilities.

    The first one is called Raijin. This sword has a few abilities:
    • Reduces the handseals needed for lightning jutsu by 2
    • Increases the damage of lightning jutsu by +10
    • The user can focus lightnin chakra into the blade turning the blade to a lightning blade that is equal to an A rank. This counts as one of the users 2 jutsu per turn.


    The second blade is called Hojin. This sword has a few abilities:
    • Reduces the handseals needed for fire jutsu by 2
    • Increases the damage of fire jutsu by +10
    • The user can focus their fire chakra into hojin and the blade will turn to fire at will. This counts as one of the users 3 jutsu per turn and the flame is as strong as A rank fire.


    These blades can only be held by sage/hawk mode users due to them drawing in natural energy, and if anyone else holds/touches them they will begin to turn into a toad statue. This two blades can be joined at the handle to make a special bow like so:

    The user will then create a chakra string between the 2 points of the blades to form a bow. This bow can fire C rank strenth arrows made of the users chakra. These arrows can be made of fire chakra, lightning chakra, or sage chakra. This arrows will travel at extreme speeds but each arrow is classed as one of the 3 jutsu per turn. This bow can also fire basic weapons like kunai.
    These swords are always drawing in natural energy that is released into the user disrupting there chakra flow aslong as they are in contact with the swords.


    ~Declined: OP...seriously, is there anything these swords can't do?~

    (Kaen Rai inferuno) - Blazing lightning inferno
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 60
    Damage: 120
    Description: The user will clap their hands together performing one handseals. As they do so, they will release a large amount of chakra around them that takes the form of lightning spinning around the user at intense speeds. As the lightning spins it gets faster and faster. This lightning releases great heat which the user will take control of this using their chakra. This will create a an orb all around the user of rotating fire and lightning using shape manipulation. The user will be in the middle of the orb, and due to the pressure of the rotation will remain there. Then the user will thrust his hands out to his sides releasing the full force of the fire and lighting in all directions blasting everything up to long range within the orb shape. As soon as the user has user this they will fall to the floor hurt from exhaustion.

    Note: Useable once
    Note: This counts as 2 out of the 3 jutsu you can use in a turn
    Note: The user takes 40 damage from the heat and exhaustion
    Note: No fire or lightning jutsu in the next turn

    ~Declined: OP~



    (Kaen Rai Mo-Do) - Blazing Lightning Mode
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range:Short-mid
    Chakra cost:50 (-20 per turn)
    Damage Points: see below
    Description: The user will focus a lot of fire/lightning chakra together throughout and around their entire body. This will turn their skin a red like colour as though they have been burnt by steam, some flames will appear around the users body touching it, but not quite burning them aswell as unfocused lightning bolts all around the users body. In this mode the users fire and lightning jutsu are boosted by +15, but they are unable to perform earth or water elements while this mode is active. In this mode, the user can stamp their foot on the ground pushing forwards, launching themselves like a blast of lightning in any direction, though this counts as one of the users jutsu and can only be used 4 times. This mode is a mainly for taijutsu use and with every taijutsu attack the user makes, the fire and lightning will surround that part of the users body increasing the attack by +20 do to the damage of the fire/lightning. The lightning will be released from the attack too, creating a parylising effect on the target.

    Note: Taijutsu get +20
    Note: Fire/lightning get +15
    Note: Lasts for 5 turns or until canceled
    Note: Can't use water or wind in this mode
    Note: The user takes 40 damage from the burning of the fire
    Note: If this mode is active for the full 5 turns the user can't use fire or lightning afterwards
    Note: No genjutsu while in this mode.
    Note: If someone hits the used in this mode with taijutsu, they will take fire damage and shocks from the lightning. This would be 20 damage on impact.

    Looks:



    ~Declined: OP~

    (Kaen Rai kens) - Blazing lightning Blades
    Rank: S rank
    Range: N/a
    Chakra Cost: -20 per turn
    Damage Points: 40 per hit
    Description: The legacy blades are twin swords that were forged together many years ago. This ancient blades were forged in Mount Myōboku in a sacred forge. These two swords were forged from the same piece of metal and were coated in the sacred oil of the toads. This oil was polished into the blades with a sacred method known only to the toads, then a the blades would under go another special forging methods. The oil was poloshed into the blades as they are ment for sage mode users. These blades have the power to draw in sage chakra which can then be absorbed by the user of the blades. This is slower than when the user draws in natural energy by themselves, about half the speed, but it's meant for when the user is unable to remain still. These two swords are know as Raiken and HokenThese swords give +10 damage to fire or lightning attacks.
    The 2 blades each have special abilities.

    These blades can only be held by sage/hawk mode users due to them drawing in natural energy, and if anyone else holds/touches them they will begin to turn into a toad statue. This two blades can be joined at the handle to make a special bow like so:

    The user will then create a chakra string between the 2 points of the blades to form a bow. This bow can fire C rank strenth arrows made of the users chakra. These arrows can be made of fire chakra, lightning chakra, or sage chakra. This arrows will travel at extreme speeds but each arrow is classed as one of the 3 jutsu per turn. This bow can also fire basic weapons like kunai.
    These swords are always drawing in natural energy that is released into the user disrupting there chakra flow aslong as they are in contact with the swords.

    Editted and added the bolded


    (Kaen Rai inferuno) - Blazing lightning inferno
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 60
    Damage: 120
    Description: The user will clap their hands together performing one handseals. As they do so, they will release a large amount of chakra around them that takes the form of lightning spinning around the user at intense speeds. As the lightning spins it gets faster and faster. This lightning releases great heat which the user will take control of this using their chakra. This will create a an orb all around the user of rotating fire and lightning using shape manipulation. The user will be in the middle of the orb, and due to the pressure of the rotation will remain there. Then the user will thrust his hands out to his sides releasing the full force of the fire and lighting in all directions blasting everything up to mid range within the orb shape. As soon as the user has user this they will fall to the floor hurt from exhaustion.

    Note: Useable once
    Note: This counts as 2 out of the 3 jutsu you can use in a turn
    Note: The user takes 40 damage from the heat and exhaustion
    Note: No fire or lightning jutsu in the next turn
    Note: No water jutsu in the same turn

    Edited the bolded



    (Kaen Rai Mo-Do) - Blazing Lightning Mode
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range:Short-mid
    Chakra cost:50 (-20 per turn)
    Damage Points: see below
    Description: The user will focus a lot of fire/lightning chakra together throughout and around their entire body. This will turn their skin a red like colour as though they have been burnt by steam, some flames will appear around the users body touching it, but not quite burning them aswell as unfocused lightning bolts all around the users body. In this mode the users fire and lightning jutsu are boosted by +10, but they are unable to perform earth or water elements while this mode is active. In this mode, the user can stamp their foot on the ground pushing forwards, launching themselves like a blast of lightning in any direction, though this counts as one of the users jutsu and can only be used 3 times. This mode is a mainly for taijutsu use and with every taijutsu attack the user makes, the fire and lightning will surround that part of the users body increasing the attack by +15 do to the damage of the fire/lightning. The lightning will be released from the attack too, creating a parylising effect on the target.

    Note: Taijutsu get +15
    Note: Fire/lightning get +10
    Note: Lasts for 4 turns or until canceled
    Note: Can't use water or wind in this mode
    Note: The user takes 40 damage from the burning of the fire
    Note: If this mode is active for the full 4 turns the user can't use fire or lightning afterwards
    Note: No genjutsu while in this mode.
    Note: If someone hits the used in this mode with taijutsu, they will take fire damage and shocks from the lightning. This would be 20 damage on impact.

    Looks:



    Edited the bolded


    New:

    (Kaen Rai kousen) - Blazing lightning Beam
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user with perform one handseal gathering a large amount of fire and lighting chakra into their middle and index finger. The user will then point air their target releasing a concentrated blast of fire, with a 1 inch diameter. Around the fire the lightning will be wrapped/coiled around it, hitting the target in sync at great speeds.

    Note: No water jutsu in the same turn.
    Note: Useable 3 times

    (Kaen Rai Tatsumaki) - Blazing Lightning Tornado
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 80
    Damage Points: 100
    Description: The user combines there lighting and fire chakra together to create this ultimate attack. First the user will build up there chakra in the air quickly creating a high powered fire tornado, then by adding there lightning chakra to it the tornado will become a fusion of fire and lightning creating a fire/lightning tornado combo thats very dangerrous. This attack can be created infront of or around the opponent, but if the user is within short range of this attack they will take the same amount of damage. The tornado forms petty quick.

    Note: No water jutsu in the same turn
    Note: Can only be used once
    Note: No s ranks or above the next turn
    Note: User will take 30 damage too if its used at mid range

    ~All Declined~ Over the weekly limit!
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Ninja Art:Koi-gyo no seishin)Ninja Art: Spirit of The Coy Fish

    Rank: S
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The User after doing a set of 4 handsigns will release a large amount of chakra and creat a Black and White Spirit of a Coy Fish the Spirit is about 40 times the size of the a Human and can move five times as fast the Coy Fish Spirit does not have to have a source of water seeing as its just a spirit the spirit can use Fire and Water attacks up to S ranked and due to its size is left up and is weak to Wind Attacks

    *Note:Can only be taught by -Itachi-
    *Note:Jutsu lasts for three turns
    *Note:User can only use A Ranked Attacks for the next 4 turns after the Spirit has left the field
    *Note:Can only be used Twice a battle

    ~Declined: No spirit summoning of any form~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kessho:Kessh sacchi kiri) Crystal: Crystal Sensing Mist
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will crystalize air moisture into tiny shards of transparent reflective crystal that will surround the area of the user’s choice. The crystal shards will be infused with the users chakra allowing them to sense the presence of beings inside the mist, the mist will completely remove the opponents field of vision as light reflects of the tiny crystal fragments blinding them.


    ~Declined: The crystals would pretty much tear your lungs open (or your opponent's lungs) as you breathe the surrounding air. Also, the jutsu in itself doesn't really make sense. Do not resubmit~

    (Kessho:Kessho Ranton) Crystal: Crystal Storm
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Mid-long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will make 2 handseals and will form a pink cloud of crystal that will form over the opponent made of crystalized air moisture the user will then make 1 handseal and the particles of crystal in the cloud will form together to make sharp jagged blade shapes that will rain down on the opponent resembling hail


    ~Declined: Read above~

    (Kessho:Kessho disuku gijutsu)Crystal: Crystal Disc Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: N/a
    Description: The user will create a disc of crystal underneath their feet, the user will then focus Fuuton chakra underneath the plate allowing the user to raise themself into the air and fly around whilst standing on it.

    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle
    Note: No Wind jutsu can be used while this is in effect
    Note: lasts until the user cancels the effects of the jutsu or the user is nocked to the ground


    ~Declined: Check bold part, change it so your jutsu last for a fixed amount of time (remember to add the chakra cost for each turn it's active)~

    (Kessho:Kessho doryoku gijutsu)Crystal: Crystal Exertion Technique
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will make one handseal and focus the crystal chakra in their body to the upmost point compressing it, until finally after making a further hand seal releasing it in one huge blast. converting the crystal chakra to crystal blades the second it leaves the body, shooting extremely hard and sharp crystal blades everywhere uncontrollably until the focused chakra is depleted piecing straight through the things it comes into contact with.

    Note: No other crystal technique in the same turn and no A rank crystal or above for the next turn
    Note: Requires 2 hand seals
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.


    ~Approved: I edited it~

    (Doton:Sakashima Ishi Shawa)Earth Style: Reverse Stone Shower
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60 (+15 if the falling debris hits as well)
    Description: The user will make 2 hand seals and slam their hands to the ground channelling their Doton chakra into the ground and spreading it evenly all around the underneath of their opponent, the user will then make a further handseal and hundreds of sharp edged, torpedo shaped, pointed, chunks of rock will fly up from the ground underneath the opponent hitting the opponent with enough force to make deep lacerations and cuts in the opponents skin. The rock will then rain down on the opponent at high speeds from above stabbing the opponent if not avoided by this point.


    ~Declined: OP for an A-rank. Rework the part where it rains down on the opponent, it doesn't make much sense. Lastly, where are the restrictions for this?~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Shikon Chi Hanone)-Were-hyena Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage Points: +30 to taijutsu attacks
    Description: The user gathers a huge amount of chakra and with the teachings of the elder hyenas begin transforming from a man into a Hyena-ninja hybrid. After entering this new form the user undergoes several changes, his hide is of the densest kind of hyena hide and is immune to lightning jutsu up to S rank. The users speed and strength increases dramatically and their sense of smell, sight (able to see at night and far away distances) hearing and touch.
    -Can feel vibrations in the ground, smell opponents and hear far better then human ears up to mid range.
    -Can track opponent by sight even in dense mist or thick jungles up to long range
    -Takes one full turn to enter.
    - Speed increase to that of Rock Lee without weights when running on all fours.
    - Teeth capable of crushing bone, rendering the body part useless.
    - Capable of producing a laugh that traps the opponent(s) in an A ranked Genjutsu that lasts for 1 turn. In the Genjutsu, the opponent(s) will think that they are turning into a werehyena themselves, bones distorting and causing immense pain.
    -Lasts 4 turns.
    -Only people who have signed the hyena contract can use
    - Useable twice per battle.

    ~Declined: I see a lot of abilities, but no restrictions. This modes grant you too many abilities, and you developed each of them to an extent that could be considered a jutsu on it's own (sight, smell, touch...etc). Also, the genjutsu is over the top in my opinion.~

    (Genjutsu: Douzen Ada ) Illusionary Technique: Natural Enemy
    Type: Defence
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: User does 5 hand seals and places his opponent's summoning in a genjutsu that makes them see the user summon as their natural predator four times the size of them (the opponent's summon), paralyzing them with fear and causing them to reverse summon away to safety.
    -Doesn't work on boss summons
    -Twice per battle.
    -Can't use A-rank and above Genjutsu for the next two turns after this jutsu
    -Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

    ~Accepted: it's a great idea, but I've changed some things. If you don't like it VMs and I'll decline your jutsu so you can re-submit it again with your own alterations.~

    (Genjutsu:ningenbanare yobou ) Illusionary Technique: Superhuman Confidence
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: User places his opponent in a genjutsu that makes them think that they are invincible and do not need to defend against the next attack and allow it to hit them expecting to be unphased.
    -Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

    ~Declined: Already exist ~

    Twin Swords of the Fiery Storm, Xull'ayne and Nill'yn
    Rank: S
    Type: Summon
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40 if summoned
    Damage points: +10 to Wind and Fire jutsu (one element each sword)
    Description: These two swords are each blessed by an ancient sage to grant a portion of their great mastery of an element.
    The first sword is Xull'ayne and is blessed with the power of an ancient Fire Sage and can cut through any Fire technique and can be used to release any Fire jutsu by the user through the blade. The second sword is Nill'yn and is blessed with the power of an ancient Wind Sage and can cut through any Wind technique and can be used to release any wind jutsu by the user through the blade.
    Due to being wielded simultaneously very often the two swords are able to perform fire/wind combos.

    -Can only be wielded by Professor Sarutobi.
    -Can't cut through Forbidden rank Wind or Fire.
    -Can't be used to release Forbidden rank Wind or Fire.
    -Twice per battle (once each sword) the user can tap into the power of one sword and coat their body in the sage's ancient chakra to use it as barrier from that element making them immune to wind or Fire for the rest of that turn. (depending on which sword is used)
    -Tapping into a sword counts as one of the user's 3 moves.
    -The swords are carried on the user's waist until needed, can still be tapped into when on the waist.


    ~Declined: Not only is the ability to cut through any wind/fire is OP, but you didn't restrict it's usage~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Yard~ View Post
    Updating a condor.

    From this.

    (Kchuysei: Hagetaka Uindo) Summoning: Hagetaka Wind:
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user does the nessecary hand seals for the summoning. This summoning calls upon "Hagetaka Uindo" (Meaning Condor of Wind). Hagetaka Uindo is one of the Giant "Hagetaka Twins" he is able to hold one Person on his back. Hagetaka Uindo can also shoot B-Rank Fuuton
    Note:
    -Can only be in play for 3-turns.
    -Can only be Summoned by someone with the Condor Contract.
    -Can only be Summoned once per battle.



    To this


    (Kchuysei: Hagetaka Uindo) Summoning: Hagetaka Wind:
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user does the nessecary hand seals for the summoning. This summoning calls upon "Hagetaka Uindo" (Meaning Condor of Wind). Hagetaka Uindo is one of the Giant "Hagetaka Twins" he is able to hold one Person on his back. Hagetaka Uindo can also use any Fuuton technique the user knows.
    Note:
    -Can only be in play for 4-turns.
    -Can only be Summoned by someone with the Condor Contract.
    -Can only be Summoned once per battle.

    ~Declined~ Increased benefits, and drawbacks decreased even more? Don't think so.



    (Kchuysei: Hagetaka Uindo) Summoning: Hagetaka Tsuchi
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user forms 2 hand seals and claps his hands together for the summoning. This summoning calls upon "Hagetaka Tsuchi" (Meaning Condor of Earth). Hagetaka Tsuchi is a condor who shows a great mastery of earth techniques. He can use any earth technique the user knows and is big enough to hold 2 people on his back. Hagetake Tsuchi can travel through the ground with great ease even better than "hidding like a mole technique" and of course, this counts as a move.
    Note:
    -Can only be in play for 4-turns.
    -Moving through the ground counts as one of the users moves.
    -Can only be Summoned by someone with the Condor Contract.
    -Can only be Summoned once per battle.

    ~Approved~


    (Kchuysei: senpai Hagetaka Takashi) Summoning: Elder Condor Takashi
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb, wipes it on the palm of his hand and slams it on the ground. This summons, senpai Hagetaka Takashi meaning Elder condor Takashi. Takashi is one of the 3 great condor Elders who has a great control over chakra. Apart from being larger than Gamabunta in size and has a wing span of almost twice the width of Gamabunta, he can use any ninjutsu technique the user knows, ( Just regular ninjutsu, no elements or anything else). When he walks the ground will shake greatly.
    Note:
    -Can only be in play for 4-turns.
    -Can only be Summoned by someone with the Condor Contract.
    -Can only be Summoned once per battle.

    ~Declined~ Too big


    (Kchuysei: senpai Hagetaka Tsubaki) Summoning: Elder Condor Tsubaki
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb, wipes it on the palm of his hand and slams it on the ground. This summons, senpai Hagetaka Tsubaki meaning Elder condor Tsubaki. Tsubaki is one of the 3 great condor Elders. Apart from being larger than Gamabunta in size and has a wing span of almost twice the width of Gamabunta, he has a great control over his mind and body. He is the most wisest of condors making him able to tell if he's being placed under genjutsu and break it easily by focusing chakra to his mind to break free of genjutsu. He can also speak telepathically to the summoner or to anyone who has signed the condor contract and can shoot a giant gust of wind with his wings that's equal to S rank and drop a water source from his mouth.
    Note:
    -Can only be in play for 5-turns.
    -Dropping a water source from his mouth counts as a move.
    -The S rank wind counts as a move as well.
    -Can only be Summoned by someone with the Condor Contract.
    -Can only be Summoned once per battle.

    ~Declined~ Same as above



    __________________________________________________ __________


    Custom Weapon





    (Kchuysei: Sendo's houtei ) Sendo's Gift
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 on the first turn summoned if summoned.)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This sword is one of two swords and was named "seiryoku" Meaning "Might". The twin swords belonged to Lord Sendo and aided Lord Sendo through many battles in the great Condor war. Lord Sendo passed his swords down to the holder of the Condor contract to aid anyone who has signed the Condor contract in battle. This is but one of the twin swords. Lord Sendo being the condor of lightning, stored lightning chakra into this sword on a daily basis for years. The chakra was stored into the handle of the sword and the user can use a small portion of it to increase his or her lightning jutsu power by one rank.
    The user will have to use some of their chakra to wield the sword and the sword recognizes different chakra types so that only the summoner can wield it. If someone else tries to wield this sword, they will be shocked with enough current to cause enough pain to drop the sword. Because of this, the sword can tell if the wielders chakra is disrupted and will send a shock to them which instantly breaks the genjutsu due to pain while allowing them to still wield the sword and not drop it since it's that quick.
    It can recognize chakra of those who have signed the Condor contract tho.


    So the abilities are:

    - +1 Rank to all Raiton jutsu.
    - Reduce handseals required for lightning jutsu by 2
    - Break free of genjutsu instantly (Takes exactly 1 second)


    Notes:

    *User must give -10 chakra in the first turn they touch the sword in order to wield it.
    * -10 Damage when breaking free from genjutsu due to the shock.
    * Doesn't need to be summoned if the sword is placed in the users bio.
    * If summoned it must be summoned within the first 3 turns.
    * Can only be summoned by those who have signed the condor contract.

    ~Declined~ Even more powerful than the Seven Swordsman Sword.. not happening.
    Custom Weapon







    (Kchuysei: Sendo's houtei ) Sendo's Gift
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 on the first turn summoned if summoned.)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This sword is one of two swords and was named "seiryoku" Meaning "Might". The twin swords belonged to Lord Sendo and aided Lord Sendo through many battles in the great Condor war. Lord Sendo passed his swords down to the holder of the Condor contract to aid anyone who has signed the Condor contract in battle. This swords special ability is being able to literally cut any lightning jutsu. Any jutsu that is aimed at the user that is lightning base will be attracted to the sword making this sword exactly like a lightning rod. With every bit of lightning that this sword absorbs, it can be fired back at the opponent. This sword can also help on the user's own Raiton techniques by adding the lightning it absorbs into the jutsu that is performed. While sword fighting, the lightning that has been absorbed can also be easily channeled through the blade making cutting and piercing and also making the slashes lightning fast, very easily.


    Notes:
    * Doesn't need to be summoned if the sword is placed in the users bio.
    * If summoned it must be summoned within the first 3 turns.
    * Can only be summoned by those who have signed the condor contract
    * If someone tries to wield the sword besides the summoner, they will be shocked with enough amps and current to kill.

    ~Declined: Read the bold part, they must go or be altered to something acceptable. Where are the restrictions on it's abilities?~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Raitoningu no rirīsu - fainaru chidori)Lightning Release - Final Chidori
    Rank: S
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The user will perform multiple handseals then form a single chidori in each hand. One will be positively cared and the other will be negatively. Te user will then use all his strength to push the 2 chidori's together though they would naturally push apart. The result is the 2 chidori's coming together and releasing an instant lightning blast that instantly destroys anything within range with power equal to Kirin.
    * The burst will push the user off balance*
    * No Lightning techs for the next 2 turns*
    * Must have mastered lightning jutsu to use this*
    * Ths jutsu happens instantaneous *
    * This is a sudden burst meaning it happens in a blink of an and stops*
    * Must be taught by Shade Dracova*

    (Chikyū rirīsu - jaiantsu sen kobushi) Earth Release - Giants Thousand Fist
    Rank: S
    Type:Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The user will perform several handseals and infuse there fist with a large amount of doton chakra. The user the will punch the earth under him making his arm fully inside the ground. The user then will make a fist come out the ground anywhere and punch the opponent. The user can continuously make arms soot out as long as he/she has there fist in the ground and as sight of the enemy.
    *Can only be used twice*
    *This jutsu is plural so you can make multiple fist expel with one usage*
    * You can only control one fist at a time*
    * Each fist cost 20 chakra points*
    * Must be taught by Shade Dracova*

    ~Both Declined:We don't accept chidori variations anymore and the second already exist ~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal : Okapi
    Scroll Owner:GITANSHU
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing:N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A

    okapi summoning

    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:The user bites his thumb and thus the required handseaqls and summons a medium size looking onkai. It looks like a girrafe but have strips like that of zebra .well due to its long legs it travels first on the ground and has a natural affinity towards lightning and can use it up to B rank jutsu, and it can also be as a way of travelling in battels like sai uses his lions.
    ~can only be taught by gitanshu~
    ~can only be summoned twice~
    ~lasts for four turns~

    Looks like


    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Magnetism Release: Iron Sand

    (Satetsu Hana) - Iron Sand Flower
    Type: Offensive / Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user draws in their Iron Sand around them in a circular form. The Iron Sand forms multiple layers that form a flower when seen from and aerial view. The Iron Sand can only block up to B-Rank jutsu. After creating the jutsu, the Iron Sand then shoots outward as projectiles that reach up to mid-range.
    ~Only blocks up to B-Rank jutsu.
    ~Doesn't block aerial jutsu.
    ~No A-Rank or higher Iron Sand jutsu for two turns after use.
    ~Can only be used 3 times per match.


    (Satetsu Āmu) - Iron Sand Arm
    Type: Offensive / Defensive / Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 25 (50)
    Damage Points: N/A (If used to crush, 40)
    Description: The user creates an arm of Iron Sand that appear out of their sleeves and can be used to grab your opponent's. The Iron Sand Arm's grip is as strong as the rank of the user so if the opponent is stronger then the user, they can break out of the grip. The arm can regenerated but won't be as strong as before. Two can be made simultaneously but the chakra cost is doubled.
    ~Can't use handseals while using as the arm covers your hand.
    ~Can be used as medium for Iron Sand.
    ~No A-Rank jutsu while using.
    ~Can only be used 5 times per match.


    (Satetsu Dōbutsu) - Iron Sand Animal
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user forms their Iron Sand into animals of their choosing and the Iron Sand animals take on the physical qualities of the animal, teeth, fangs, and horns. (No internal qualities.) The animals can be made in a small form, 5 of each, medium, 3 of each, and large, 1. The large one is only capable of being sustained while in Short-Range.
    ~Can only be formed where a large amount of Iron Sand is.
    ~No S-Rank or higher jutsu after use for four turns.
    ~The large animal can stand to about 8 feet high.
    ~The large animal moves much slower then the other sizes but can take one A-Rank jutsu. (After being hit, it will lose it's form.)
    ~Can only be used 3 times per match if creating small or medium animal, or 2 times if creating a large animal. It is impossible to use this jutsu to create a large animal if it was used twice before to create small or medium sized animals.


    ~All Approved: I fixed the usages on each of them though~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Futon:Uzumaku kaze)-swirling winds
    Type:Attack
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:
    For this justu the user uses two sword in two hands or one sword in one hand and then with his other hand twirls around both in a disk type rotary motion and with that motion releases a powerful twirling wind which keeps rotating around at quick speeds and moves towards the opponent and then envelopes the opponent and then begins slashing him at all the sides at a very high speed. This wind has a powerful circular motion and therefore pulls the air from the surrounding atmosphere rapidly inward and along with the air if there is lightning spread in the surrounding air it is also pulled in and therefore any lightning in its path is nullified.
    -The user needs to have mastered kenjutsu.
    -This jutsu can be used 3 times in a match.
    -No S rank or higher Futon for the next round.
    -It can be used to cary any single body in the air.

    __________________________________________________ _________________



    ~Declined: I was about to approve it until I got the bold part. Even though it's S-ranked, I'm pretty sure it can't defeat Kirin. You need to take into account the size of a jutsu and not just the rank. Change it with "can defeat most lightning" and then it's approvable~
    ~Resubmitting~
    (Futon:Uzumaku kaze)-swirling winds
    Type:Attack
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description:
    For this justu the user uses two sword in two hands or one sword in one hand and then with his other hand twirls around both in a disk type rotary motion and with that motion releases a powerful twirling wind which keeps rotating around at quick speeds and moves towards the opponent and then envelopes the opponent and then begins slashing him at all the sides at a very high speed. This wind has a powerful circular motion and therefore pulls the air from the surrounding atmosphere rapidly inward and along with the air if there is lightning spread in the surrounding air it is also pulled in and therefore any lightning in its path is nullified.
    -The user needs to have mastered kenjutsu.
    -This jutsu can be used 3 times in a match.
    -No S rank or higher Futon for the next round.
    -It can be used to carry any single body in the air.
    -It can nullify most non-focused electricity and most (but not all) of the focused powerful electricity. The size of the Lightning jutsu is to be taken into account. (Kirin cannot be nullified)


    Note:
    Added the bold part.
    __________________________________________________ _________________


    ~Approved: I've fixed it for you ^^ (bold part)~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Hercules) - Summoning Technique | Hercules
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Hercules is a Rhinoceros Beetle (sub-species Hercules Beetle in particular) that stands twice the size of a human. Unlike most beetles he stands on two feet and is bipedal like a human. This allows him to use the remaining four limbs as arms for things such as hand seals or weapon wielding. As a Rhinoceros beetle, the strongest creature per mass of the world, his strength is unparalleled and is capable of lifting objects many times his own size or weight. He carries a shield in one hand and a large sword in the other. Due to his thick and hard exoskeleton he is able to withstand B-rank and below techniques. He is also able to open up his wings and take flight, though due to his disproportionate weight he has very slow speed. His elemental affinity is earth which he can use up to S rank and counts as one of the user's three moves.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Can only remain on the field for five turns.

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: ) - Summoning Technique: Ataka, the Flying Tank
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Akata is a large Japanese Rhinoceros beetle nearing the size of a large helicopter. He is quite slow but makes up for it in power and defense. His hard layer of armor can protect him from A rank and below attacks and his wings allow him to fly, though quite slowly due to his size. This has earned him the nickname of the "Flying Tank". His elemental affinities are lightning and fire, which he can release a powerful combined S-ranked blast of twice per battle which counts towards the user's three moves. This can't be used on consecutive turns.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Can only remain on the battlefield for four turns.
    -S-ranked fire/lightning battle can only be used twice per battle and not on consecutive turns.
    -Can withstand up to 100 damage before dis-summoning.

    (I have signed Black Uchiha's Rhino Beetle contract and have permission to submit my own summons.)

    ~Both declined: The first one is just unrealistic (a beetle making handseals?) and the second one is plain OP. Amaterasu deals 90 damage, yet I'm sure your summon couldn't survive it~

    (Mahi Hijutsu: Kontan baindingu) Secret Paralysis Technique | Soul Binding
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: This technique requires an advanced knowledge of the human body, particularly the joints and muscles. The user will release a very small needle called a waishin and throw it into a specific location of the body such as a joint or a muscle. The location of the needle will cause extreme pain when the targeted joint or muscle attempts to move making it impossible to use those areas. Due to the shape and size of the needles they're incredibly hard to see when thrown without the aid of doujutsu and cannot be simply pulled out when discovered (though that doesn't mean they can't be removed). Because of their thinness and the velocity they're thrown at, they can't be felt when entering the body. These needles can also be thrown simultaneously with other weapons to further mask their presence.
    -Can only be used by a current or past member of the medical school.
    -Cannot paralyze any life threatening muscles.

    ~Declined~
    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Hercules) - Summoning Technique | Hercules
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Hercules is a Rhinoceros Beetle (sub-species Hercules Beetle in particular) that stands twice the size of a human. Unlike most beetles he stands on two feet and is bipedal like a human. This allows him to use the remaining four limbs for wielding weapons. As a Rhinoceros beetle, the strongest creature per mass of the world, his strength is unparalleled and is capable of lifting objects many times his own size or weight. Using his four arms he carries a two large swords, a shield and a lance. Due to his thick and hard exoskeleton he is able to withstand B-rank and below techniques. He is also able to open up his wings and take flight, though due to his disproportionate weight he has very slow speed. His elemental affinity is earth which he can use up to B rank by simply stomping his foot. The use of his earth techniques counts towards the user's three moves.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Can only remain on the field for five turns.

    Removed the hand seal part and replaced it with foot stomping, lowered the rank he can use techniques from S to B.


    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: ) - Summoning Technique: Ataka, the Flying Tank
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Akata is a large Japanese Rhinoceros beetle nearing the size of a large helicopter. He is quite slow but makes up for it in power and defense. His hard layer of armor can protect him from A rank and below attacks and his wings allow him to fly, though quite slowly due to his size. This has earned him the nickname of the "Flying Tank". His elemental affinities are lightning and fire, which he can release a powerful combined S-ranked blast of twice per battle which counts towards the user's three moves. This can't be used on consecutive turns.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Can only remain on the battlefield for four turns.
    -S-ranked fire/lightning battle can only be used twice per battle and not on consecutive turns.

    Removed the damage limit.


    (Doton: Atlas' Kanwa, Shouhen Seken) - Earth Style | Atlas' Relief, Shattered World
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user forms three hand seals and slams their palms on the ground. This raises a giant statue of the Greek legend Atlas behind the opponent. The statue is roughly the height of Gamabunta and is formed with his back to the target. He holds a mountainous sized boulder on his back designed to look like the earth. Despite its large size it forms quickly, similar to how earth release: mountain smash forms. Once formed his hands let go of the boulder causing it to roll off his back and drop onto the enemy below. When it hits the earth it shatters spilling out into a huge pile of rubble, with the target crushed beneath.
    -Due to its size it can only be used once per battle.
    -Can only be used by Kage or above.


    (Mahi Hijutsu: Kontan baindingu) Secret Paralysis Technique | Soul Binding
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: This technique requires an advanced knowledge of the human body, particularly the joints and muscles. The user will release a very small needle called a waishin and throw it into a specific joint or a muscle of the opponent's body. The location of the needle will cause extreme pain when the targeted joint or muscle attempts to move making it impossible to use those areas. Due to the shape and size of the needles they're incredibly hard to see when thrown and cannot be simply pulled out when discovered (though that doesn't mean they can't be removed). Because they're thrown with decent speed and the target's focus is elsewhere, the needles don't cause pain when entering the skin. These needles can also be thrown simultaneously with other weapons such as kunai or shuriken to further mask their presence.
    -Can only be used by a current or past member of the medical school.
    -Cannot paralyze any life threatening muscles.
    -Can only paralyze up to two muscles or joints at a time.

    ~All Declined: Your over your weekly limit. You've submitted 5 customs on the 25th of August and now those 5 on the 29th of August~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    ~Its been a week since my last submission~
    Approved Fourth Kazekage bio
    Quote Originally Posted by The Pervy Sage View Post
    (Katon: kasai kakujuu) - Fire style: Fire expansion
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: +25
    Description: After releasing a fire jutsu the user will perform 2 handseals as they release there chakra into the fire jutsu. In doing so, the user will increase the power and size of the fire jutsu boosting any fire jutsu by 25 damage points. By the increase in chakra the fire gains more power as it absorbs more oxygen increasing its power.

    Note: Can only use used on fire the user or the users summon has created
    Note: Can only be used once one each fire jutsu creates
    Note: can only be used 3 times
    Approved

    (Raiton: kiri kakujuu) - lightning style: lightning expansion
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: +25
    Description: After releasing a lightning jutsu the user will perform 2 handseals as they release there chakra into the lightning jutsu. In doing so, the user will increase the power and size of the lightning jutsu boosting any lightning jutsu by 25 damage points. By the increase in chakra the lightning gains more power as the power of the electrical current is increased.

    Note: Can only use used on lightning the user or the users summon has created
    Note: Can only be used once one each lightning jutsu creates
    Note: can only be used 3 times
    Approved

    (Fuuton: kaze kakujuu) - Wind style: Wind expansion
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: + 25
    Description: After releasing a wind jutsu the user will perform 2 handseals as they release there chakra into the wind jutsu. In doing so, the user will increase the power and size of the wind jutsu boosting any wind jutsu by 25 damage points. By the increase in chakra the wind gains more power as it increases the power of the wind blast aswell as the size by expanding the wind currents.

    Note: Can only use used on wind the user or the users summon has created
    Note: Can only be used once one each wind jutsu creates
    Note: can only be used 3 times
    Approved

    (Suiton: Mizu kakujuu) - Water style: Water expansion
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: +25
    Description: After releasing a water jutsu the user will perform 2 handseals as they release there chakra into the water jutsu. In doing so, the user will increase the power and size of the water jutsu boosting any water jutsu by 25 damage points. By the increase in chakra the water gains more power as the wave of water increases in size and the power and speed of the water is increased.

    Note: Can only use used on water the user or the users summon has created
    Note: Can only be used once one each water jutsu creates
    Note: can only be used 3 times
    Approved
    Quote Originally Posted by The Pervy Sage

    Then sure, you can make it
    I got permission from The Pervy Sage to submit a Gold Dust version.

    (Sakin: Sakin Kakujuu) - Gold Dust: Gold Dust Expansion
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: +25
    Description: After releasing a gold dust jutsu the user will perform 2 handseals as they release their chakra into the gold dust jutsu. In doing so, the user will gather more gold dust particales around the battle field increasing the power and size of the gold dust jutsu boosting any gold dust jutsu by 25 damage points. By the increase in chakra the gold dust gains more power as the size of the technique increases.

    ♦ Can only use used on Gold Dust the user has created
    ♦ Can only be used once one each Gold Dust jutsu created
    ♦ Can only be used 3 times
    ♦ Can only be used by Luffy.. & Gin-San

    ~Declined~ I will decline the one I accepted accepted with Ice. These expansion techniques shall remain centered around the 5 basic elements.

    Quote Originally Posted by Luffy.. View Post
    (Sakin: Gourd Akutibe-shon) - Gold Dust: Gourd Activation
    Rank: S
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: After performing a single hand seal, the user will “activate” his gold dust gourd to act as a shielding mechanism from incoming attacks. The gourd will instantly turn itself into gold dust and block any incoming attacks. The user can choose not to be shielded by the dust if he desires. The gold dust can block attacks from any direction even below ground. If the user looses his footing for example by a swamp or a river. The dust will turn into a floating platform to hold the user. Although in this state the dust can not be used to shield from any other incoming attacks. The gold dust can block A rank and blow techniques. Concentrated lightning techniques (A ranked) or powerful enough lightning techniques such as Kirin would easily get passed the defense. A ranked fire would be hot enough to melt the gold dust. If used to block an S rank technique it would work but the activation would end. The shield can't block S ranked concentrated lightning techniques or fire techniques.

    ♦ The activation can only be done once per battle
    ♦ The gourd stays active for 5 turns
    ♦ Every time the gourd shields the user it counts as one of the three turns
    ♦ No gold dust techniques for one turn after the activation ends.
    ♦ Can only be used by the Fourth Kazekage
    ♦ Must be taught by Mathias
    ~Declined~ better restrictions
    Resubmitting

    (Sakin: Gourd Akutibe-shon) - Gold Dust: Gourd Activation
    Rank: S
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: After performing a series of three hand seals, the user will “activate” his gold dust gourd to act as a shielding mechanism from incoming attacks. The gourd will instantly turn itself into gold dust and block any incoming attacks. The user can choose not to be shielded by the dust if he desires. The gold dust can block attacks from any direction even below ground. If the user looses his footing for example by a swamp or a river. The dust will turn into a floating platform to hold the user. Although in this state the dust can not be used to shield from any other incoming attacks. The gold dust can block A rank and blow techniques. Concentrated lightning techniques (A ranked) or powerful enough lightning techniques such as Kirin would easily get passed the defense. A ranked fire would be hot enough to melt the gold dust. If used to block an S rank technique it would work but the activation would end. The shield can't block S ranked concentrated lightning techniques or fire techniques.

    ♦ The activation can only be done once per battle
    ♦ The gourd stays active for 2 turns
    ♦ Every time the gourd shields the user it counts as one of the three turns
    ♦ No gold dust techniques for two turns after the activation ends.
    ♦ Can only be used by the Fourth Kazekage
    ♦ Must be taught by Luffy..

    ~Approved: Changed the time it stays active to 2 turns~

    Quote Originally Posted by Luffy.. View Post
    (Sakin: Jiten Otame Gorudo) - Gold Dust: Turning into Gold
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Like shown with Gaara in the chuunin exams. After performing a simple hand seal, the users body will completely turn into gold dust. But unlike Gaara’s technique. The user spreads throughout the battle field like a mist of gold dust. Then where ever the mist of gold dust is, the user can then choose to re-appear as long as there are gold dust particles flying in that area.

    ♦ Can only be used twice per battle.
    ♦ One turn waiting period to re-use.
    ♦ Can only be used by the Fourth Kazekage
    ♦ Must be taught by Mathias.

    ~Declined~ You're only s-jounin

    (Sakin: Tsuchi Kireme Daun) - Gold Dust: Earth break down
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Using magnetism release, the user will concentrate and decompose any earth substance into pure gold dust as long as the earth being decomposed is not infused with the opponents chakra. The created gold dust can be used for further gold dust related techniques.

    ♦ Can only be used three times per battle
    ♦ One turn waiting period to re-use.
    ♦ Can only be used the Fourth Kazekage.
    ♦ Must be taught by Mathias.

    ~Declined~You're S-jounin.
    High enough rank.

    (Sakin: Jiten Otame Sakin) - Gold Dust: Turning into Gold Dust
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Like shown with Gaara in the chuunin exams. After performing a simple hand seal, the users body will completely turn into gold dust. But unlike Gaara’s technique. The user spreads throughout the battle field like a mist of gold dust avoiding any physical attacks. Then where ever the mist of gold dust is, the user can then choose to re-appear as long as there are gold dust particles flying in that area.

    ♦ Can only be used twice per battle.
    ♦ One turn waiting period to re-use.
    ♦ Can only be used by the Fourth Kazekage
    ♦ Must be taught by Luffy..

    ~Declined do not resubmit: no more "turning into element" jutsu shall be approved~

    (Sakin: Tsuchi Kireme Daun) - Gold Dust: Earth break down
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Using magnetism release, the user will concentrate and decompose any earth substance into pure gold dust as long as the earth being decomposed is not infused with the opponents chakra. The created gold dust can be used for further gold dust related techniques.

    ♦ Can only be used three times per battle
    ♦ One turn waiting period to re-use.
    ♦ Can only be used the Fourth Kazekage.
    ♦ Must be taught by Luffy..

    ~Declined: You can't naturally turn earth to gold. The Fourth Kazekage was harvesting the naturally found particle in the earth and sand to perform his technique~

    (Doton: Going Merry Kibarashi) - Earth Style: Going Merry Recreation
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 every time a cannon ball is shot)
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: After performing a series of five hand seals, the user will concentrate all of his/her doton chakra and slam their hands onto the ground. By doing so the Straw Hat Pirates’ full size ship the “Going Merry” will be created made completely of earth from the ground itself. As long as the user is aboard the ship his/her earth style techniques will require three less hand seals to perform. The ship itself is able to float in water sources(The ship will not turn into mud unless it is on that water source for longer than two turns) and mud itself (for ex. Swamp of the underworld). Depending on the elemental advantages the ship can block B-Rank and below techniques but the part that was hit will crumble afterward. If any attacks are coming from above, the user can walk inside the “meeting room” of the ship for cover. The unique ability of the ship is that it can shoot A-Ranked cannon balls made of earth from the ships main cannon in the front. The ship has a stock of five cannon balls. Every cannon ball has multiple explosive tags attached to them that can be detonated with the use of a single hand seal.

    ♦ Can only be used once per battle.
    ♦ No earth style techniques in the previous turn.
    ♦ No earth style techniques in the same turn the ship is being created. (Shooting the cannon ball does not count)
    ♦ If the ship is not destroyed it will stay in play for 3 turns.
    ♦ Because of the massive use of doton chakra, the user will not be able to form A-Rank or above earth techniques for the next turn or S-Rank for two.
    ♦ Shooting the cannon balls counts as one of the three jutsu’s per turn.
    ♦ The shot cannon balls reach up to mid range.
    ♦ Can only be used by Luffy..

    Feel free to add any restrictions or edit anything, thanks ^_^

    ~Approved: I changed what's in bold and took away the part about fragment going to long range.~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Doton: Chikyū no naka Kami) - Earth Release: Rebirth of the Earth God
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self-Affected
    Chakra cost: 50 (+10 per turn.)
    Damage points: N/A (-20 to the user.)
    Description: The user will make a single hand sign causing several brown Kanji signs to appear over his whole body which then begins to glow with a brownish aura. As the Kanjis appear they will begin to draw in natural chakra from the earth, causing the user to enter a state called Ancient Earth Mode, which makes him able to ultlize a stronger form for earth release, it's more hardened and faster than ever. Only the most high ranked and skilled Earth users have been able to get acces to this state.

    Ability which the user gains:
    -The users durability, stamina, strenght and speed inceases drastically.
    -The user gains mastery over the Earth Element which makes him able to mold/use earth techniques without the need of hand signs.
    -The users Earth techniques will get boosted by +25 and +10 Taijutsu.
    -The user will be able to sense anything which contains chakra, that touches the ground.
    Drawbacks:
    -The Kanjis on the users body will remain glowing brownish for five turns after entering the mode, when the five turns end, the kanjis will loose their glow and the user will return to normal.
    -The user cannot use any elemental ninjutsu execpt for for earth release, mainly because of the high amount of earth chakra within his body. Though non-elemental ninjutsu may still be taken in use in this mode.
    -When the five turns end and the Kanjis loose their glow the user will return to normal with a heavily strain on their body and heavy breathing which leaves him pretty much open for attacks(The strain will be equaling to 20 damage on the user.)
    -The user aswell will only be capable of using two jutsus per turn for 3 turns after he exits this mode.

    (Added bolded part, hopefully it will get approved now. >_<)

    ~Declined: Still OP~
    (Doton: Chikyū no naka Kami) - Earth Release: Rebirth of the Earth God
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self-Affected
    Chakra cost: 50 (+10 per turn.)
    Damage points: N/A (-20 to the user.)
    Description: The user will make a single hand sign causing several brown Kanji signs to appear over his whole body which then begins to glow with a brownish aura. As the Kanjis appear they will begin to draw in natural chakra from the earth, causing the user to enter a state called Ancient Earth Mode, which makes him able to ultlize a stronger form for earth release, it's more hardened and faster than ever. Only the most high ranked and skilled Earth users have been able to get acces to this state.

    Ability which the user gains:
    -The users durability, stamina, strenght and speed inceases drastically.
    -The user gains mastery over the Earth Element which makes him capable of performing jutsus without the need of hand signs.
    -The users Earth techniques will get boosted by +15 and +10 Taijutsu.
    -The user will be able to sense anything which contains chakra, that touches the ground.
    Drawbacks:
    -The Kanjis on the users body will remain glowing brownish for five turns after entering the mode, when the five turns end (too long), the kanjis will loose their glow and the user will return to normal.
    -The user cannot use any elemental ninjutsu execpt for for earth release, mainly because of the high amount of earth chakra within his body. Though non-elemental ninjutsu may still be taken in use in this mode.
    -When the five turns end and the Kanjis loose their glow the user will return to normal with a heavily strain on their body and heavy breathing which leaves him pretty much open for attacks(The strain will be equaling to 20 damage on the user.)

    (I Hope changing the boosts did it more acceptable. .-.)

    ~Declined: Check the bold part, you have close to no chance of getting it approved with those kind of abilities. It it's not drastically different in terms of abilities next time I'll be forced to ask you to stop resubmitting this one. (The part about sensing everything that touch the ground is a rip off of one of Goro's custom)~

    (Doton: Dasutibōru) - Earth Release: Dusty balls
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Medium
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points 40
    Description: The user makes a kicking motion strafing his foot across the ground. By doing user will cause a large volume of dust to be spread into the air, covering the area infront of the user in a dust whirlwind. Whilist the dust gets spread up into the air, several (5) barely seeable balls gets shot through the dust and hits the opponent with penetrating damage.
    -The balls can be easily detected by a Dōjutsu user
    -Can only be used 4 times per match



    ~Approved: Added restrictions and changed the range~

    (Doton: Gurando Bakuhatsu Chikyū Hadō) - Earth Release: Grand Exploding Earth Wave
    Type: Supplementary, Defensive, Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user will forcibly clap his palms together and spits out a great volume of soft earth/dirt from their mouth, which would be enough the field up a ocean. This will create waves of soft earth which will crush any person who stands underneath the wave with it's weight, the user will be capable of riding any of these waves if he wishes. This technique is similiar to Kisame's Water Release: Exploding Water Colliding Wave.

    ~Declined: Spitting enough dirt to fill an ocean? The Pacific Ocean is 714 410 cubic kilometer of water. I think it's safe to say your jutsu is a bit unrealistic~


    Feel free to edit whereever you feel to make it acceptable.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Darijan View Post
    The following jutsus have nothing to do with HBA-s dragon summoning contract


    Fire Dragon's Sword Horn (Karyū no Kenkaku)
    Rank:A
    Typeffensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: The user ignites his whole body in fire, and he runs at the opponent at hige speed raming into the opponent and dealing huge damage to the target, after the user rams into the target he can also use his leg or arm to shoot the opponent upwards.
    Notes:
    Usable 3 times per battle
    No fire jutsus for this and the next turn
    in the same move this jutsu was used he cant use forbiden rank tecs for the next 4 turns



    ~Declined: You set yourself on fire and suffer no damage? A forbidden rank technique isn't necessarely powerful, it just mean that you hurt yourself. From the description of your jutsu, it could be classified as Forbidden. Hence, you need to specify how you protect yourself from the fire. Layer of chakra maybe...~


    Fire Dragon's Flame Elbow (Karyū no Enchū)
    Rank:A
    Typeffensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: The user starts shooting fire from his elbow tip, boosting the power and speed of his punches, when the fire starts shooting from the elbow tip the user charges with huge speed at the opponent, and punches him into any body part.
    Notes:
    Usable 3 times per battle
    No fire jutsus for this and the next turn
    in the same move this jutsu was used he cant use forbiden rank tecs for the next 4 turns

    ~Approved~

    Crimson Lotus: Fire Dragon Fist (Guren Karyū Ken)
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The users palms get covered in crimson red flames, then the user rapidly charges at his opponent and he starts punching into the opponent with huge power and speed, with every punch that hits the target a small explosion on the body of the target appears leaving heavy burns on the skin
    Notes:
    Usable just one time per battle
    In the same move this was used the user will be able to make just 2 jutsus all together
    No fire for the next 2 turns
    No s ranked jutsus the next turn

    ~Approved~

    Fire Fang(Ho Saiga)
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The users covers his nails in fire, extending them a bit, after that he rushes at the opponent and he starts slicing with his claws on the entire body of the opponent, every little scratch will make burns on the wounds making them even more painfull.
    Notes:
    Usable 3 times per battle
    No fire jutsus for this and the next turn
    in the same move this jutsu was used he cant use forbiden rank tecs for the next 4 turns

    ~Approved: I'll approve this one even after what I said in your first jutsu, but only because the fire is small~
    Resubmit:

    Fire Dragon's Sword Horn (Karyū no Kenkaku)
    Rank:S
    Typeffensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points:100(20 to the user due to the heat and the fire around him)
    Description: The user ignites his whole body in fire, and he runs at the opponent at hige speed raming into the opponent and dealing huge damage to the target, after the user rams into the target he can also use his leg or arm to shoot the opponent upwards.(When the user is running towards the opponent he gains +2 levels on the speed)
    Notes:
    Usable once per battle
    No fire jutsus for this and the next turn
    no forbiden ranked jutsus for the rest of the battle

    ~Declined: Respect the template for forbidden techniques and add some real restrictions with regard to it being a forbidden technique. Causing you to suffer 20 point of damage won't affect you in any way in this battle. There need to be physical damage that will actually have an impact on your aptitudes to fight. That is the definition of a forbidden jutsu~

    (Kuchiyose: Howaido Nami)Summoning White Wave
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will bite his finger and put blood over his summoning tatoo or make the needed hand seals and slam his hand to the ground to summon Nami, a female lion from Šiškovci. She can preform water jutsus up to A rank Without preforming any hand seals, but she also has mastered the art of walking on 2 legs and using her front legs as hands. She is very reliable and sociable and she will like to have a little chat with anyone who summons her. She also wears a long white cloak with the white water wave kanji on it(written in blue): 白い水の波.
    Notes:
    • Can be summoned once per battle
    • She can last up for 4 turns or he can take the damage from 2 A ranked jutsus and 1 B ranked
    • In the move the summoner summons Nami he wont be able to preform any water jutsus, and after nami is gone he wont be able to preform any summonings for the next 2 turns
    • Every jutsu Nami preforms counts as a move of the user
    (it was approved but i couldnt find the jutsu :/)


    (Kuchiyose: Howaido Nami)Summoning White Wave
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will bite his finger and put blood over his summoning tatoo or make the needed hand seals and slam his hand to the ground to summon Nami, a female lion from Šiškovci. She can preform water jutsus up to S rank Without preforming any hand seals, but she also has mastered the art of walking on 2 legs and using her front legs as hands. Another ability of Nami is to swim. She can swim in water(except its electrified)for 2 turns(She cant breath underwater, just swim) She is very reliable and sociable and she will like to have a little chat with anyone who summons her. She also wears a long white cloak with the white water wave kanji on it(written in blue): 白い水の波.
    Notes:
    • Can be summoned once per battle
    • She can last up for 4 turns or he can take the damage from 2 A ranked jutsus and 1 B ranked
    • In the move the summoner summons Nami he wont be able to preform any water jutsus, and after nami is gone he wont be able to preform any summonings for the next 2 turns
    • Every jutsu Nami preforms counts as a move of the user

    ~Approved~

    New ones:

    (Howaido Raion Kuchyiose: Mori)White Lion Summoning: Mori
    Rank: S
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Chakra:40
    Damage:N/A
    Range: Short
    Description: The user makes the needed hand seals, or he puts bood over his white lion summoning tatoo to summon Mori. Mori is one of the elder lions. Despite his age he can use his forder legs as hands to do hand seals. He is specialized in Wood release jutsus, and he can use them up to S rank. Mori isnt wearing a white coat, he thinks that it doesnt fit him. Mori is very patient and he almost never argues.
    Note: Must have signed the White Lion summonig contract.
    Note: Can only stay on the field for 4 turns.
    Note: No other summonings for 2 turns after Mori is gone.

    ~Declined: Your summon can only use elements you've mastered or related to your bio. Also, only Yamato, Hashirama and Danzo can use Wood element~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Daiki View Post
    Custom weapon
    Hishou Kaze(Soaring Wind)
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range:N/a
    Chakra Cost:20 (Per Wind slice Attack)
    Damage Points:40 (Per Wind slice Attack)
    Description:The Blade was created when Daiki started his Fuuton training, Favouring the element he created a sword that could boost his wind attacks him.The sword itself is very long,the Hilt reaches his head and the blade runs down his back to his legs although its not large in width.The sword has a few abilities requireing alot of chakra to perform.It is made of the strongest Metals found by Daiki making the sword Hardy. It can be used in offencive or defencive manorisms as with most other weapons. The sword is beholds a special ability allowing it to creating a Slicing Cresent Moon wind attack which is able to slice through B-rank Rock And A-rank lightning.The Cresent moon attack can slice through normal water although does not have a big enough surface area to affect large area of effect water jutsus.It has powerful affects on lightning being able to destroy even high ranking attacks and as elements go would have no advantage against fire due to the wind feeding to fire This may only be used 5 time in battle.Due to the sword being infused with pure Fuuton, it gives other Fuuton +10 damage and reduces the handseals needed for Fuuton jutsu by 1.
    ~The sword decreases the amount of handseals needed for a Fuuton jutsu by 2
    ~The sword increases the damage of Fuuton jutsu +10
    ~the swords Cresent attack can slice through B-rank rock and Lightning attacks. May only be used 5 times in battle and after used may not be repeated for 1 turn

    Note:Can only be used by Deragonu
    Note:Cresent moon attack is around 2m wide and can be performed almost instantaneously
    Note:After using Cresent Moon attack next Fuuton move deals 5 less Damage

    Feel free to edit where needed
    Looks:


    ~Declined: OP. Take off the part where you can freely manipulate wind. It can cut through wood and rock but what about the other elements? The rest looked ok.~
    Resubmitting

    Custom weapon
    Hishou Kaze(Soaring Wind)
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range:N/a
    Chakra Cost:20 (Per Wind slice Attack)
    Damage Points:40 (Per Wind slice Attack)
    Description:The Blade was created when Daiki started his Fuuton training, Favouring the element he created a sword that could boost his wind attacks him.The sword itself is very long,the Hilt reaches his head and the blade runs down his back to his legs although its not large in width.The sword has a few abilities requireing alot of chakra to perform.It is made of the strongest Metals found by Daiki making the sword Hardy. It can be used in offencive or defencive manorisms as with most other weapons. The sword is beholds a special ability allowing it to creating a Slicing Cresent Moon wind attack which is able to slice through B-rank Rock And A-rank lightning.The Cresent moon attack can slice through normal water although does not have a big enough surface area to affect large area of effect water jutsus.It has no advantage against fire due to the wind feeding to fire. This may only be used 3 time in battle.Due to the sword being infused with pure Fuuton, it gives other Fuuton +10 damage and reduces the handseals needed for Fuuton jutsu by 1.
    ~The sword decreases the amount of handseals needed for a Fuuton jutsu by 1
    ~The sword increases the damage of Fuuton jutsu +10
    ~The swords Crescent attack can slice through B-rank rock and A-rank Lightning attacks. May only be used 3 times in battle and after used may not be repeated for 1 turn
    ~The Crescent attack count as a move in the user's turn

    Note:Can only be used by Deragonu
    Note:Cresent moon attack is around 2m wide and can be performed almost instantaneously
    Note:After using Cresent Moon attack next Fuuton move deals 5 less Damage

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    ~Approved: Edited some stuff~
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 08-31-2011 at 12:30 PM.

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