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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Oumu Jutsu: Supa Supa ) Parrot Arts: Pirate Cutlass
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user preform one one-handed handseal, and then extend his hand. From there, 2 parrots will fly at incredible speed, linked together by a thin extensible wire, visible with doujutsu. The parrots will swirl around a target, severing it multiple times before vanishing. They can sever all flesh, no matter the size and even bone, yet can only severe hard substancial techniques (Like Earth, Metal or Kaguya Bone) up to the rank of the technique.
    The parrots can severe several targets, yet they don't stay on the field for long. The pirates move at speeds that overthrow members and their summons of even Sannin rank, in mid-range, yet Kage only in short range, where the technique is pretty much point-blank.
    *Can only be used twice*


    ~Declined~ This is OP. A wire so small you can't see it yet it can cut almost anything? The rank here doesn't change anything. Steal is steal, whether or not it's used in a D-rank or S-rank technique. Work on that part and make sure you don't underestimate Kaguya bones too. Also, work on the bold part, I don't get what you mean there.
    (Oumu Jutsu: Supa Supa ) Parrot Arts: Pirate Cutlass
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user preform one one-handed handseal, and then extend his hand. From there, 2 parrots will fly at incredible speed, linked together by a thin extensible wire, visible with doujutsu. The parrots will swirl around a target, severing it multiple times before vanishing. They can sever all flesh, no matter the size and even bone, yet can't severe hard substancial techniques (Like Earth, Metal or Kaguya Bone).
    The parrots can severe several targets, yet they don't stay on the field for long. The parrots will reach the target before they're able to preform 3 hanseals handseals, for members and their summons of even Sannin rank, in mid-range, yet Kage only in short range, where the technique is pretty much point-blank. This means that if the handseal is seen, they will only be able to use jutsus that require less than 3 handseals on those conditions.
    *Can only be used twice*


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ This is simply unacceptable. You didn't work on the part I asked you to correct (the "only visible to doujutsu" part) and you added this OP bold part about being unavoidable to jutsu needing over 3 hand seals.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:02 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Houto Tame Keimei) Way to Dawn
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40 (if summoned)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Way to Dawn is the name of Riku's most highly favored sword. Riku constantly keeps it in his sheathe, having to often use it in battle, but if not already sheathed, he can call it to the field at any time (this requires no hand seals, so he can do it fluently and quickly in battle, but does require the above chakra amount). It's appearance is quite peculiar, most notably the wing on the inner part of it's blade. The main color of the blade is somewhere between a dark red and black, transitioning in colors from black to dark red from the blade edge to the blade's back respectively. One half of the blade's guard is compromised of what seems to be a demonic wing, whilst the other seems to be an angelic counterpart. Way to Dawn is of fair size for a blade, and Riku most often uses it with one hand, allowing for efficient and quick attacks. The blade's affinity, being that it's Riku's blade, belongs with ice-related techniques and jutsu. First, whenever the blade is in Riku's hand, he is capable of doing all ice jutsu with barely any handseals, but rather simply by swinging the blade or, in some cases such as the ice spike jutsu, stabbing it into the ground and three times per battle, the Riku can use this blade to increase any one of his ice-techniques ranks by one (obviously excluding forbidden-rank techniques). The sword can, at any time, be imbued with ice chakra that will increase it's durability and cutting power, though this, obviously, requires the user to use up more chakra. When the user does this, the blade will also become larger than normally and be covered in what seems to be a light blue coating, giving the sword extra reach, though still leaving it at the same weight and still allowing Riku to hold it the same way and still be balanced. The sword also has several other abilities (to be submitted as customs).
    Note: When focusing ice chakra into the sword, the user will lose ten chakra points per turn.
    Note: This blade can only be held by Riku. If anyone but Riku so much as touches its hilt, the blade will slowly encase them in ice while at the same time dropping their body's temperature exponentially. The ice will first begin to creep up their hands until it covers their entire body.

    ~Declined~ Check the bold part. Summon it with a special seal you need to touch, or with hand seals, but not out of thin air. Make it so it lowers your hand seals by 2-3 but change that part. Make it so it can only boost A-rank and lower by one rank.
    Changes made ^^. I took out the reducing hand seals part completely considering that most ice techniques use like one seal anyway, but I did leave in the part about being able to swipe the blade or stab it into the ground since nothing was said about that. If there is a problem with that, I won't mind that being taken out if it means that this weapon gets approved.

    (Houto Tame Keimei) Way to Dawn
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40 (if summoned)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Way to Dawn is the name of Riku's most highly favored sword. Riku constantly keeps it in his sheathe, having to often use it in battle, but if not already sheathed, he can call it to the field at any time with the use of a single hand seal that summons the blade to the user. It's appearance is quite peculiar, most notably the wing on the inner part of it's blade. The main color of the blade is somewhere between a dark red and black, transitioning in colors from black to dark red from the blade edge to the blade's back respectively. One half of the blade's guard is compromised of what seems to be a demonic wing, whilst the other seems to be an angelic counterpart. Way to Dawn is of fair size for a blade, and Riku most often uses it with one hand, allowing for efficient and quick attacks. The blade's affinity, being that it's Riku's blade, belongs with ice-related techniques and jutsu. First, whenever the blade is in Riku's hand he is capable of using certain techniques by swinging the blade or, in some cases such as the ice spike jutsu, stabbing it into the ground and three times per battle, Riku can use this blade to increase the power of any one of his ice-techniques of A-rank or lower by one rank. The sword can, at any time, be imbued with ice chakra that will increase it's durability and cutting power, though this, obviously, requires the user to use up more chakra. When the user does this, the blade will also become larger than normally and be covered in what seems to be a light blue coating, giving the sword extra reach, though still leaving it at the same weight and still allowing Riku to hold it the same way and still be balanced. The sword also has several other abilities (to be submitted as customs).
    Note: When focusing ice chakra into the sword, the user will lose ten chakra points per turn.
    Note: This blade can only be held by Riku. If anyone but Riku so much as touches its hilt, the blade will slowly encase them in ice while at the same time dropping their body's temperature exponentially. The ice will first begin to creep up their hands until it covers their entire body.

    ~Approved~
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:03 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Hyourinmaru – Ice Ring
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: A sword that has been passed down through Yuki clan for ages. It was broken before, in the war where the Yuki Clan almost became extinct. The sword is said to be made out of the heart of a special meteor that fell in the village. The meteor was as cold as ice, and had all the properties of ice. The Yuki Clan took the meteor, and forged a sword out of the core of this heavenly rock. As the sword was formed, it gleamed heavily and continued to send out a soft blue light. The user of this sword gets a +15 damage point boost on every Ice Release jutsu used, as well as slowly freezing anything it comes in contact with. Of course not the wielder, considering it must be one of the Yuki Clan to wield this. The sword also comes with a most secret technique. It gives the user the ability to use send out a wave of ice from the tip of the sword. This wave can be used as a direct attack or shield). It also has the ability to let the user use any ice-release attack without any hand seals.
    Note: The wave can only be used once (so the user has to choose for the offensive or defensive side)
    Note: When using the wave, it has the attack power of an A-rank attack, and can only defend up to A-rank attack, except fire.
    Note: The user can only use an ice attack without hand seals twice
    Note: The user can only use attacks without hand seals when having the sword in his hands.
    Note: Only one of the Yuki clan can wear this sword (especially Wesobi). If anyone else touches it, he/she gets frozen instantly.
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    ~Declined~ OP. Work on all those abilities...this sword is almost stronger than the 7SM. Take out the part about it reducing all hand seals to zero for ice jutsu. Work on it, you stacked many abilities that could have been hard to approved if it was the only this sword possessed.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:06 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Otoshi To) - Trapdoor
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates a circular portal through which he shoots his jutsu. That portal is also used in "Mud Fall" and "Dropping Lid" technique. Through that portal user can send only jutsus that have mass (meaning only earth and water). No living being can be sent through it.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ This can be considered time/space, which is against the rules.

    (Raiton No Jutsu) - Lightning Style Technique
    Rank: C
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Descripton: The user is able to make clearly visible objects by using their chakra to dense and move the lightning at great speed (if he creates a pillar one cannot stand on it like he could on earth). Jutsu can be used to create shapes like small sized pillars of lightning, tools, and shields of lightning (Just like earth style technique).

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist and by doing pillars and shield you'd actually be ripping off the cannon technique.

    (Taibu Raiton no Jutsu ) Greater Lightning Style Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: attack/defence
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user is able to make clearly visible objects by using their chakra to dense and move the lighting at great speed (if he creates a pillar one cannot stand on it like he could on earth). Jutsu can be used to create shapes like medium sized pillars of lightning, tools, and shields of lightning (Just like earth style technique with more chakra used in order to make objects bigger and stronger).

    ~Declined~ Same as above.

    (Katon No Jutsu) - Fire Style Technique
    Rank: C
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Descripton: The user is able to make clearly visible objects by using their chakra to dense and move the fire at great speed (if he creates a pillar one cannot stand on it like he could on earth). Jutsu can be used to create shapes like small sized pillars of fire, tools, and shields of fire (Just like earth style technique).

    (Taibu Katon no Jutsu ) Greater Fire Style Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: attack/defence
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user is able to make clearly visible objects by using their chakra to dense and move the fire at great speed (if he creates a pillar one cannot stand on it like he could on earth). Jutsu can be used to create shapes like medium sized pillars of fire, tools, and shields of fire (Just like earth style technique with more chakra used in order to make objects bigger and stronger).

    ~Both declined~ Same as above. Those are rip off of already existing cannon and custom techniques.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:15 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    ( Kuchyose| Ko Senpai Karasu ) Summoning| Great Elder Raven

    Rank: S
    Type: Summoning
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Range: Short - Long
    Description:
    The user will do the necessary handseals when the user finish that he/she will summon a second version of a Elder Raven this version is stronger since this Raven had live for a long time now, his age is unknown due to his thoughts of ages but people have said rumors that his about 67 year old. This great elder raven is able to use wind up to b-rank and fire up to a-rank but this raven is also, able to get to get contact of the opponent through the ground meaning that this Raven is able to find chakra of the opponent through the ground only, can be use four times on battle. The size of this elder is the size of Gamakichi.

    - Must have sign the Raven contract to use this jutsu.
    - This can only be summon once.
    - Can only last, on battles five turns
    - If the raven uses a a-rank fire technique the contact through the ground lower's and can only be use twice on battle.


    ~Declined~ Work on the bold part. Make it clearer.

    ( Kuchyose| Ko Kira Karasu ) Summoning| Great Killer Raven

    Rank: Forbidden
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: N/A (-25 to the user when summon)
    Range: Short - Long
    Type: Summoning
    Description:
    The user will summon Great Killer Raven which is the second, version of Killer Raven this raven is a female she's known as Great Killer Raven due too her slightly way to kill people this version is rarely summon on battle due to her power they have been rumors that she's amazingly strong on battle. This female Raven has yellow and blue feathers, her feathers represent the elements she's able to use meaning she could use water and lightning. Great Killer Raven is able to use water up to s-rank without water source she is really powerful when it come's to water, she don't need a water source for water due to her training she has study water since a little raven and she was train by it for about three years. She's able to use lightning up to a-rank since she was born on Kumogakure she had great training. In order for this female raven to do jutsus with hand seals the user that summon her to the battle field need's to be on the raven back and do the hand seals for the raven. The peak of this raven is able to transform into a sword call 'Feathers' this sword is rarely use by the Raven. Great Killer Raven is the size of Gamabunta.

    - The Great raven stay's on battlefield for five turns.
    - The sword call Feathers goes away the next, turn and it can't be use again.
    - Must sign the Rave contract.


    ~Declined~ No Forbidden-rank summoning. Work on the abilities and the description too.

    ( Kuchyose| Fukusuu Karasu ) Summoning| Multiple Ravens

    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Type: Summoning
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description:
    The user first, will do the necessary hand seals and summon three ravens on battlefield each, of this raven is able to do only one element. The first, raven name is 'Light' the second, raven name is 'Dark' and the third, raven name is 'Sunset' each of their name has a meaning. Light is able to do earth jutsus up to b-rank only, when his on the ground, Dark is able to do taijutsu and is able to fight only at close range and Dark stand's up like a normal humans and fight with his strong wings and Sunset is able to fly at high speed on the sky though these three ravens are a team but they are hardly summon on battle they mostly summon on war. Light has only white feathers, Black has only back feathers and Sunlight has only yellow feathers. The size of these three summoning is the size of the known Gamabunta.

    - These three summoning only last 3 turns on battlefield
    - If Light uses one b-rank earth jutsu he can't use a b-rank earth jutsu again
    - Must have sign the Ravens contract


    ~Declined~ Submit all of those individually and make them smaller. Only boss summon can be as big as Gamabunta.
    ( Kuchyose| Ko Senpai Karasu ) Summoning| Great Elder Raven

    Rank: S
    Type: Summoning
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Range: Short - Long
    Description:
    The user will do the necessary handseals when the user finish that he/she will summon a second version of a Elder Raven this version is stronger since this Raven had live for a long time now, his age is unknown due to his thoughts of ages but people have said rumors that his about 67 year old. This great elder raven is able to use wind up to b-rank and fire up to a-rank but this raven is also, able to get to get contact of with the opponent through the ground meaning that this Raven is able to find the opponent no matter where he is for example, if the opponent is underground the Raven is able to find him and tell he/she where he/she is. The size of this elder is the size of Gamakichi.

    - Must have sign the Raven contract to use this jutsu.
    - This can only be summon once.
    - Can only last, on battles five turns
    - If the raven uses a a-rank fire technique the contact through the ground lower's and can only be use twice on battle.


    ( Kuchyose| Karasu Gijutsu ) Summoning| Raven Art

    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Type: Summoning
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    The user first, will do the necessary hand seals and slam their hands on the ground which would summon a Raven known as 'Art'. This raven is an evil raven is has the personality of the known snake 'Manda' when this raven is summon to battle he get's really mad but at the same time he love's to fight and he get happy and start's to have fun. This raven feather are way different than normal ravens feather this raven feather are color Bazaar, this feathers are really rare and they have a meaning of being rare. This raven was born on Konohagakure and it has special abilities due to the feathers. This raven is able to do wind all the way up to s-rank and is also, able to trap people on his special genjutsu call 'Bazaar trap'. When Art release his genjutsu he first, has to put his wing up facing the opponent and by the second later, the opponent will be trap on the genjutsu on this genjutsu the opponent see a place where their was war and stuff alike such as his saddest moments on life for example, user one summon's Art to the battlefield as soon as Art is summon he use's his genjutsu and the opponent will get trap at it, when the opponent get's trap he will see many different wars and all his saddest moment on his whole life. While his trap on the genjutsu, the user is able to do what he wish to do with the opponent.

    - The genjutsu don't need eye sight from the opponent to be activate
    - The genjutsu is only usable twice per battle
    - Art only can last, five rounds
    - When Art use an s-rank wind element the Genjutsu limit lower's to only usable once per battle
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    ~Both declined~ When re-submitting a jutsu, but the added part in bold. Otherwise we won't check them.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:16 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Ninja āto:ū mōdo)Ninja Art: Elemental Mode

    Rank:S
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short - Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Despriction: The user will focus on all of there Chakra Natures and send a different element chakra type to each part of there body and after its all moved to each part of their body they will release the chakra and have it surround each part of there body but the part have to be the same each time the jutsu is used the order is (Head- Fire, Chest- Earth, Arms- Lightening, Legs- Water)

    *Note: Due to the the amount of chakra that has to be used the user will be physically drained and will not be able to use a S ranked jutsu of any Nature for 2 turns
    *Note: This jutsu lasts three turns
    *Note: Can only be taught by -Itachi-
    *Note: Each part of the users body is weak to its usal counter elements (except the Head which is weak against B ranked Water Jutsu's

    ~Declined~ What does it do? From what I read your jutsu doesn't do anything.


    (Raiton to sūtsukonbinēshon: Sutoraikinguwārupūru)Raiton and Suiton Combination-

    Rank:S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The user will summon a giant field of water that surroundsthe whole field in front of them then once the whole field is covered the user will take control of their chakra thats inside the water and make the water spin faster and faster until the water rises around their oppent tossing them around again and again causing them alot of damage then the user will slam their hands on the ground send a field of lightening throught the ground and causes the opeent to be electrocuted

    *Note: After using this jutsu the user cant use any S ranked Lightening and Suiton for the next turn
    *Note: Can only be tought by -Itachi-

    ~Declined~ Take out the part with the lightning, this isn't 2 jutsu combined, it's just one technique. Where are the usage restrictions? Also, make your description a lot clearer.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:19 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton: Ouch! Waga Shuseki) Water release: Ouch! My head
    Type: Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will point with the index finger at the opponent's nose, and send chakra and extreme speeds towards the nasal cavities. Then, he will control the natural liquid of the nose and expand it, just enough to provoke a headache that will dis-concentrate the opponent, and the opponent will bring his hand towards his head in pain. This also will disorient the opponent.
    -This jutsu can be used to stop the opponent from using a jutsu, though, the jutsu requires at least one handseal to be effective.
    -The technique does not damage severely the opponent, just puts his head in pressure, provoking a big sudden headache.
    -This jutsu can only be used 3 times
    -Can only be taught by Gin-San


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ No jutsu that takes control of their opponent's body.

    (Naiyou-no jutsu) Detail No Jutsu
    Type: All
    Rank: N/A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Points: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will relax his muscles, and study the move of his opponent. The user then will locate flaws in the opponent's move and exploit them. If the flaw is too obvious, or too stupid, detail no jutsu can be used in such way, that the user will write a huge wall of text, explaining the opponent's fault in the most educated way possible and conceiving the win to the user.
    -Can only be used by Gin-San


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ If you submit such stupid jutsu again you will be banned for a week. Don't come to my profile to try and explain you were serious with this submission.

    (Kea Mo-do) Kea Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The opponent will cut drag some blood and slam his hands together, concentrating wind and Kea chakra into the user, entering Kea Mode. The user will have some feather-like tatoos in his elbows, representing wings, and his hair will grow larger and turn white. In Kea Mode, the user gains a speed boost comparable to rock lee without weights, though not close to gates. The user will also gain stronger reflexes, comparable to Minato's. The user is unable to get caught in genjutsu B-rank and below because of the Kea chakra flowing in his body.
    -The user has to have recolected chakra in the previous turn, meaning he can only do two moves in the turn prior of activation.
    -Can only be used by those who have sign the Kea contract
    - In this mode, the user gains a boost of +10 in ninjutsu.
    -The mode only last 3 turns
    -While this mode is active, the user is unable to perform genjutsu
    -The user loses -5 in taijutsu based damage
    -The user is unable to perform higher than A-rank fire while the mode is active
    -After the end of the mode, the user will be exhausted, leaving an opening for an attack
    -After this mode ends, the user is unable to perform higher than B-rank wind and basic ninjutsu for 3 turns.
    -Can only be taught by Gin-San


    ~Approved~ Made it last 3 turns.

    (Kuchiyose no Justu: Bosu Rendan) - Summoning Technique: Boss Rendan
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: After extracting some blood and performing the necessary handseals, the user is able to summon Rendan. Rendan is enable to carry at least one person. He is able to fly and stay in the air. Even though smaller in size than other boss summon seen, his speed totally compensates it's size.
    Rendan is able to fly at extreme speed, and much faster if he isn't carrying anyone in his back. Rendan is able to do S-rank and below Wind techniques that require two handseal or less, this proves his mastery in wind style, though, any attacks of his count as a move.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle
    -Can only stay for five turns
    -Must have signed the Kea contract
    -Must be taught by Gin-San


    ~Approved~ Took out the part about telepathy.

    (Fuuton: Kaze Yari)-Wind Release: Wind Spears
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user will make a single handseal then concentrate his chakra in the air, and control it to create spears of concentrated, visible wind, which can be used to attack the target. The user can control the spears via his crakra without physical contact.
    -No wind jutsus A-rank and above next turn


    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (jishaku-youshiki jishaku hei) Magnet Style:Magnet wall
    Rank:B
    Range:Short
    Type:Supplementary
    Chakra cost:50
    Chakra Damage:The users attack +10
    Description: The user does 2hand seals and palm his hands to the ground making it a visible magnetic circle wall around memaking it that nothing with metal can pass through under a A rank jutsu. if its a B and below it not only stops the user jutsus but send it back to the with double the speed maken it +10 more damage points

    -Last 4turns
    -Only be use by magnet style users
    -Only can be used if taught/given permission by Teno
    -Cannot be activated 1st move

    ~Declined~ Change the description and make it only apply to flying metal projectile, iron techniques, and gold techniques. Take out the +10 damage when it goes back. In fact, make it half as week as the original technique. Make this jutsu S-rank and work on the restrictions.
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    (jishaku-youshiki kaneyoroi ) Magnet style:Metal Armor
    Rank:B
    Range:Short
    Type:Supplamentary
    Chakra Cost:50
    Chakra Damgage:N.a
    Description:The users do 2 hand seals putting a Magnet repulse type armor on him. making it the fact that if anybody with magntism style uses a magntism jutsu it cuts the jutsu power in half as it hits you. so you only take half damage

    -Has to be used at start of battle
    -Last for 3turns
    -Only learned/permssion given by Teno757

    ~Declined do not resubmit~
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    (jishaku-youshiki ) Magnet style:Kamikaze Clone
    Rank:A
    Range:Long
    Type:Attack/Supplementary
    Chakra cost:70
    Chakra Damage:65(If attacked)
    Descprition: The user form a hand sign to make a magnetic clone. making all magnetic users if use magnet style jutsus just attack him since he is pure magnetic. if he is used as a offensive. The clone just runs straight into you . once it contacts you the magnetic charge drains into your system overwhelming your electrons making them explode a little bit

    -Clone Last for 4turns
    -Once hit by 1 attack its gone
    -can be use 3times pr battle
    -Only taught/permission given by teno

    ~Declined~ This jutsu doesn't make any sense. Magnetism doesn't take physical form.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by -McKnockout- View Post
    (Kikaichu Tsukamu Kumite: Kyousei Sumakku-daun!) – Destruction Bug Kata: Great Smackdown!
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Defense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: An advanced version of "Destruction Bug Kata: Smackdown!", in which the user also coats the crowd of insects around his limb(s) with chakra. But this time, with much more chakra, coating his Kikaichū bugs with a much denser layer of protective chakra and slams his limb (most probably his arm) down onto the ground to dissipate any attack up to A-rank e.g. Earth pillars, incoming A-ranked wind/fire/lightning blast, etc. The use of this technique disperses all the bugs that had enveloped the user’s limb by the former jutsu and thus, the “Destruction Bug Kata” ends.
    Note: Aerial attack can no be dissipated, the user must slam his limb onto the ground for this jutsu to work.
    Note: “Destruction Bug Kata” ends with the usage of this jutsu.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
    Created by DopeyDwarf and McKnockout
    ~Declined~ Please explain HOW you dispel an incoming attack. Is slamming on the ground a way to cause a shock wave?
    (Kikaichu Tsukamu Kumite: Kyousei Sumakku-daun!) – Destruction Bug Kata: Great Smackdown!
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Defense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: An advanced version of "Destruction Bug Kata: Smackdown!", in which the user also coats the crowd of insects around his limb(s) with chakra. But this time, with much more chakra, coating his Kikaichū bugs with a much denser layer of protective chakra and slams his limb (most probably his arm) down onto the ground with great force thereby creating a shock wave that is capable of dissipating any attack up to A-rank e.g. Earth pillars, incoming A-ranked wind/fire/lightning blast, etc. The use of this technique disperses all the bugs that had enveloped the user’s limb by the former jutsu and thus, the “Destruction Bug Kata” ends.
    Note: Aerial attack can no be dissipated, the user must slam his limb onto the ground for this jutsu to work.
    Note: “Destruction Bug Kata” ends with the usage of this jutsu.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
    Created by DopeyDwarf and McKnockout
    Yeah, slamming on the ground is a way to create a shockwave that will be capable of dissipating an attack, thats why the jutsu only works if the user slams his limb onto the ground. He can't for instance, swat away an attack coming from the sky above him.

    ~Approved~

    (Kikaichu Junshuu) – Kikaichu Territory
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Defense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40 (+10 each turn it's activated)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The host performs two quick handseals as he releases or commands his Kikaichu bugs to burrow into the ground beneath him up to a mid range radius, releasing a small amount of chakra as they’re underground. The result of this jutsu means that the ground will be imbued with the user’s chakra, making it impossible for the opponent to use earth-based jutsus using the earth from the ground in which the user’s Kikaichu bugs have burrowed through for a short period of time i.e. the opponent can not manipulate the earth in which contains the user’s Kikaichu bugs for earth jutsus. After two turns, the user’s Kikaichū bugs resurface and hence the jutsu ends.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: Lasts for 2 turns.
    Note: Must wait 2 turns to activate again.
    Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
    Created by McKnockout


    ~Declined~ Doesn't make any sense. You'd basically die from chakra exhaustion if you were able to infuse the earth with enough chakra for your opponent to be unable to use it.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Daiki View Post
    I have permission of Riku.. to make the Iguana summoning contract



    Summoning Animal: Iguana
    Scroll Owner: Daiki
    Other Users who have signed contract:N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: Takeru
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A
    I'll post them if they get approved.

    Description:
    Iguana is a herbivorous genus of lizard native to tropical areas of Central and South America and the Caribbean.Iguana possess a dewlap, a row of spines running down their back to their tail, and a third "eye" on their head. This eye is known as the parietal eye, visible as a pale scale on the top of the head. Behind their neck are small scales which resemble spikes, known as tuberculate scales.
    Iguanas have excellent vision and can see shapes, shadows, colors and movement at long distances. Iguanas use their eyes to navigate through crowded forests, as well as for finding food. They use visual signals to communicate with other members of the same species,



    Signers of the contract must get the Iguana tattoo


    ~Contract Approved~

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Takeru ) - Summoning Technique:Takeru 'Scaled Tank'
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage: N/A
    Description:Takeru is the boss Iguana summon,He is the largest of the Iguanas and is around half the size of Gamabunta although is very long due to his huge tail.He isnt the Fastest of Iguana's although has a huge layer of scales making attacks A-rank and below useless against him.This has earned him the nickname of the "Scaled Tank". His elemental affinities are Earth and water,which allows him to release a powerful S-ranked blast twice per battle which counts towards the user's three moves. This can't be used on consecutive turns.Takeru can also use his tounge to whack over enemys and his huge tail to smash through A-rank Rock.Summoners can easily ride Takeru and escape attack from jutsus by hiding in special protection pods in his cheeks,Takeru has incredible area awareness due to his "Third Eye" allowing even slight change in the Environment to be Detected
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Can only remain on the battlefield for four turns.
    -S-ranked Blast can only be used twice per battle and not on consecutive turns.


    Boss Iguana Declined. Too over powered. Godzilla couldnt take this guy down


    Resubmitting boss
    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Takeru ) - Summoning Technique:Takeru 'Scaled Tank'
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage: N/A
    Description:Takeru is the boss Iguana summon,He is the largest of the Iguanas and is around half the size of Gamabunta although is very long due to his huge tail.He isnt a Fast of Iguana's although has a huge layer of scales making attacks A-rank jutsu and below useless against him.This has earned him the nickname of the "Scaled Tank".Although he is Weak towards Wind jutsu being effected by B-rank and below His elemental affinities are lightning and water,which allows him to release a powerful S-ranked blast twice one per battle which counts towards the user's three moves. This can't be used on consecutive turns.Takeru can also use his tounge to whack over enemys and his huge tail to smash through almost all solid objects although this leaves him vunerable.Summoners can easily ride Takeru and escape attack from jutsus by hiding in special protection pods in his cheeks,Takeru has incredible area awareness due to his "Third Eye" most enviormental changes in the climate to be detected.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle.
    -Can only remain on the battlefield for four turns.
    -S-ranked Blast can only be used once per battle and not on consecutive turns
    -Must have signed Iguana contract to use


    ~Declined~ OP. Lower the abilities...a lot. Change the fact that he's basically immune to attack A-rank and under. I'm pretty sure I've got some A-rank that could kill it.

    (Lazy Sutoraiku ) - Lazy strike
    Type:Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage: 45
    The user focus's his chakra into his Iguana summon, the Iguana will then suddenly and swifty jump at the enemy/target.The iguana moves so fast that its untrackable unless with a 2T sharingan.The iguana will use its mass to smack the opponent down and crush him with its weight. The user can control the iguanas speed by increasing/Decreasing the chakra flow
    Note:Must have Iguana summon present on field to use
    Note:must have signed Iguana contract to use


    ~Declined~ OP. Untrackable with a 2 tomoe, really? Naruto with the Kyuubi cloak was trackable by Sasuke, so you're saying this Iguana is going faster then that?

    (Iguana Seirei Modo) – Iguana Spirit Mode
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage points: N/A (+ 10 to Ninjutsu)
    Description:The user stands still in a motionless state and gathers up chakra of their own and that of an Iguana,The user will draw in the chakra and mix them both.This takes time so the user can eliminate this weakness by having a shadow clone gather up the chakra while the suer can remain fighting.The user will then gain a a Green glow around their body and will blink revealing their now Iguana eyes.There Nails will turn black and sharp,gain green spines down their back and the user will enter Iguana Spirit mode,Similar to Sage mode.The user also gains the ability to sense chakra and Enviromental changes, and gains a +10 boost to Ninjutsu.While in this mode the Users Speed also increases alot.
    Note: After Iguana spirit Mode is finished the user is exaushted cuasing him to cause -5 Taijutsu damage.
    Note:May only be used by Daiki
    Note:Must of signed Iguana contract


    ~Declined~ No more human/animal hybrid will be accepted.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton: Mizuhou)-Water: Water Gun
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user makes the Tiger handseal, while focusing water chakra into the tips of his fingers, then the user will release the water chakra. The Chakra will shot out of the users finger tip like a bullet, with penpoint accuracy, that would cut through steel.
    - Can cut through any solids, but will get weaker as it used.
    - Can only be used 3 times per battle, and must wait another 2 turns to use again.
    - Myst be taught by -Tauburn-

    Declined, similar jutsu exists as cannon technique in the new manga

    (Raiton: Nibaiboruto)- Lightning: Double Bolt
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user will focus lightning chakra into both of his hands, then will throw his upper body forwards towards the opponent, releasing the lightning chakra in his hands, the lightning once released will form a beam from both hands that crashes into the opponent, knocking them back.
    - Can be used 4 times per battle.
    - Must be taught by -Tauburn-


    ~Approved~ Made it 4 times per match. Keep the image.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦


    Raiton :Biggu Bangouu Boufuuu No Jutsu), | Lightning Release :Big Bang Storm
    Rank: s
    Type: Attack
    Range: mid-long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user first gather big amount of his raiton jutsu the he channel it into his hiands then he raises his hands in front of him . Then, he fires Double Lightning Cannons one after another that make a storm of lightning blasts that explode like grenades at the opponent. The increase of exploding beams eventually create a giant cloud of pure chakra, inflicting a huge amount of damage.
    -can only be used twice per turn
    -can only be used by kaimshiro and ~crow~
    -can't use any raiton jutsu at the same turn or S , A rank jutsu at the next turn
    -can't use any custom at the same turn
    -must master raiton and aact
    -must know lightning cannon

    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Oshirisu no Tenkūryū) - Summoning Technique: Slifer The boss Of Hoopoes
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: N/A (-20 damage to the user when summoned)
    Description: Slifer is Huge Hoopoe he is huge he even bigger than gamahiro and he the same size as gamabunts he has red skin as well he can use fire techniques S rank and above he can also make Lightning techniques S rank and above he can use them but the one that not short range nor the ones with hand seals however the user can make the hand seals for him and he make the techniques also he can make a Forbidden attack Lightning or Katon jutsu but just one and if he make any attack at the same turn he will disappears also to make the hand seals for him you must be in touch with him as on his back
    - Only stays on the field for 5 turns
    - Can't uce any Fire or Lightning jutsu at the same turn
    - if he made a forbidden katon or lightning jutsu he won't be able to use any s or forbidden jutsu just a and above
    -Also he can't use any customs just the regular techniques
    - must have signed the Hoopoes contract
    - Can only be used by -Kamishiro-

    (Fuuton :Sono Kinto'un ), | Wind Release :The Flying Nimbus
    Rank: S
    Type: supplemnetry
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A Yellow cloud that can carry gamabunta made by Huge wind jutsu To make it the user must gather huge amount of his fuuton chakra,As he feel it he release the chakra from him body creating a cloud then he combine dust with it making it a yellow cloud that can travell all over the world also the user can attack while he is on it
    - lasts 5 turns
    -can't use any fuuton jutsu while on it
    -can use any forbidden jutsu after he makes that cloud
    -can't use any fuuton jutsu at the same turn he make the cloud
    -can't use any custom next turn


    (Raiton : Shinzui No bakudan ), | Lightning Release : Spirit Bomb
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: Users of the Spirit Bomb gather huge amounts of chakra from all his body, and conduct that chakra into a massive sphere of astounding destructive power. chakra takes the visual form of sparkling, glittering wisps when adding to the mass. The creation of the attack promotes a calm breeze away from the bomb, which turns into a strong continuous gale and expels colorful bands or radiation of Northern Lights-esque aurora. When used it is quite swift, and if the user is not careful of it, the Spirit Bomb could absolutely obliterate a planet. then as the rasenshuriken on the sage mode of naruto the user throws it into the opponent and as it's so so fast it can reach the opponent if he is on the short range less than one second and if he is on the mid range 1 seconds and on the long range 3 seconds
    -can only be used twice per turn
    -must mastered raiton and aact to use this jutsu
    -can't use any custom at the same turn
    -can't use any forbidden or S rank jutsu at the next turn
    -can't use any raiton jutsu at the same turn
    -can't use rasenshuriken at the same turn as the hand will be so tired


    (Raiton : Shouten No Kousen ), | Lightning Release : Death Beam
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:The user Gather Huge amount of Raiton chakra so huge then as he feel it, he channel the chakra into his finger on his right hand and then he form all the chakra and put it into the front of his finger and then he fires a small lightning blast but it's so fast also it's so strong as it can go through a person body at 5 seconds also for short range it can reach the opponent at 1 seconds for mid range it takes 3 seconds and for long range it take 6 seconds

    -must mastered raiton and aact to use this jutsu
    -can't use any custom at the same turn
    -can't use any forbidden or S rank jutsu at the next turn
    -can't use any raiton jutsu at the same turn
    -can't use rasengan at the same turn or any jutsu than needs hand seal cuz his hand that has the finger that blasts the jutsu won't be able to gather chakra for a turn


    ~All declined~ This is Naruto, not Dragon Ball -___-. Your summon is OP, make it use 1 element top and up to A-rank.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (fuuton: suzumebachi) wind release: hornets
    Type: Offence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30 (+10 for each extra one max 4)
    Damage Points: 60 (+5 fpr each extra one)
    Description:after prefoming 3 handseals the user will spit out 4 hornets that are made completly out of fuuton chakra due to there wings they are able to turn and follow a enemy if they try to dodge them
    -can only be taught by heavens blade/teno757

    (genjutsu: bia go-guru) illusion techique: beer goggles
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: after preforming 4 handseals the opponent will get double vision and become unstable on thier feet having the same symptons of being extremly drunk can also be used on ones self to enable them to use drunken fist
    -can only be taught by Heavens Blade/teno757

    ~Both declined~ Both lack descriptions and restrictions. Also, make them both up to mid-range maximum.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Tensa Zangetsu) - Heaven Chain Slaying Moon
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20 for fire jutsu
    Damage Points: 60 from fire blast
    Description: Ichigo's shrinks is a daitō (Japanese long sword) with a black blade instead. The cross guard has four prongs bent out to form the shape of the manji (which is the kanji for "ban," meaning "full", as in "full release"). The blade itself can endure even the strongest of attacks, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks. It can even withstand getting crushed by force. A short length of chain with a broken link at the end dangles from the base of the hilt. Tensa Zangetsu is a special blade forged in the hawk village with sacred methods that allow the sword to draw in natural energy at half the speed of a normal ninja. This only works when the sword is in one of the users hands and they state that they are doing so. The user is able to focus their charka into the sword surrounding it with fire charka, thought this fire turns to black due to the sword's effect. This fire increases the damage of basic kenjutsu by +20 damage. This lasts for up to 3 turns and can be used twice per battle. The user can swing their sword releasing this fire blast which will travel in a crescent shape up to mid range. This counts as one of the users moves per turn.

    Note: Can only be used by Ichigo Uchiha
    Note: Both fire abilities count towards the 3 moves per turn


    ||Declined|| No point in letting you suffer in wait, I figured.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Dr. House View Post
    My last submission was on the 10th, so new submissions!

    (Fuuton: Yurushi no burēdo) - Wind Release: Blades of Forgiveness
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offense / Supplementary
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90
    Description: The user will stomp the ground, making a tunnel, and blows huge amounts of highly compressed air, forming blades of air into the ground, and with one handseal, blades of air will errupt from the ground, puncturing him from underneath.
    Note:
    -Can be used up to 1 times in a battle.
    -doujutsu's can see through ground and can respond to it.
    -Only those who has mastered Fuuton can use this.
    -You can't use any other Fuuton jutsus in the same turn, hence it will take up all your Fuuton chakra.
    -In the next turn, you can't use any higher then a B-ranked Fuuton justu
    -Can be taugh only by Dr. House
    -If the user uses it in mid range, it will inflict -30 damage, and if used in short range, the user dies.

    ~Declined~ Why is this Forbidden rank? Either make it S-rank or change the description and restriction accordingly.

    (Raiton:Gi no supiningu) Lightning Release: Spinning Righteous
    Rank: S-Ranked
    Type: Offense
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will channel raiton chakra to the palm of his hand, hence manipulating the raiton to create a flat/round disk like lightning around his hand. After made, it can be thrown at the opponent.
    Notes:
    -Can be used twice
    -It travels fast, hence it's made of lightning
    -User needs to have lightning mastered
    -If the user wants, he can be connected to this disk as it's thrown, as emmiting chakra increasing it's range of the disk, basically making it wider.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Raiton:Kyūkyoku no raitoningu to saishū-tekina hakai) – Lightning Release: Ultimate and Final Lightning Destruction
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 90
    Description: This is considered the ultimate and final ground lightning attack. After performing a chain of hand seals the user will place their hand on the ground converting their chakra into lightning. The user then sends an enormous bolt of electricity that cuts through the ground very deeply in the direction of the enemy, and has an effect up to 2.5 meters from the ground surface. The shape of the bolt is a triangular with the base in the direction of the user and the tip headed towards the target. It causes devastating destruction on its way and generates enough heat and power to destroy whatever it comes into contact with. It's similar to lightning release: lightning destruction, but it's stronger.
    Notes:
    -Can be used up to 1 times in a battle.
    -doujutsu's can see through ground and can respond to it.
    -Only those who has mastered Raiton can use this.
    -You can't use any other Raiton jutsus in the same turn, hence it will take up all your Raiton chakra.
    -In the next turn, you can't use any higher then a B-ranked Raiton justu
    -Can be taugh only by Dr. House
    -If the user uses it in mid range, the intensive strength of the jutsu will cause him -30 damage, and if done in short range, the user dies.

    ~Declined~ I was about to lecture you on what makes a forbidden technique forbidden, but your last restriction saved me the trouble. Just work on the bold part and add some drawbacks when you use the jutsu mid-long range.
    Resubmission, still in this week period: (hence I submitted 3 out of 5, I can still submit 2, hence the limits are 5.)

    (Fuuton: Yurushi no burēdo) - Wind Release: Blades of Forgiveness
    Rank: S-ranked
    Type: Offense / Supplementary
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will stomp the ground, making a tunnel, and blows huge amounts of highly compressed air, forming blades of air into the ground, and with one handseal, blades of air will errupt from the ground, puncturing him from underneath.
    Note:
    -Can be used up to 2 times in a battle.
    -doujutsu's can see through ground and can respond to it.
    -Only those who has mastered Fuuton can use this.
    -You can't use any other Fuuton jutsus in the same turn, hence it will take up all your Fuuton chakra.
    -In the next turn, you can't use any higher then a B-ranked Fuuton justu
    -Can be taugh only by Dr. House
    -If the user uses it in mid range, it will inflict -30 damage, and if used in short range, the user dies.

    ~Approved~

    (Raiton:Kyūkyoku no raitoningu to saishū-tekina hakai) – Lightning Release: Ultimate and Final Lightning Destruction
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 100 (+30 If combined with water)
    Description: This is considered the ultimate and final ground lightning attack. After performing a chain of hand seals the user will place their hand on the ground converting their chakra into lightning. The user then sends an enormous bolt of electricity that cuts through the ground very deeply in the direction of the enemy, and has an effect up high from the ground surface. The shape of the bolt is a triangular with the base in the direction of the user and the tip headed towards the target. It causes devastating destruction on its way and generates enough heat and power to be capable of leaving a huge devastation behind, as creating a huge destruction. It's similar to lightning release: lightning destruction, but it's stronger.
    Notes:
    -Can be used up to 1 times in a battle.
    -doujutsu's can see through ground and can respond to it.
    -Only those who has mastered Raiton can use this.
    -You can't use any other Raiton jutsus in the same turn, hence it will take up all your Raiton chakra.
    -If used, as a combination with water, as the charged rocks will brake up, creating a really strong charged mudish water wave.
    -In the next turn, you can't use any higher then a B-ranked Raiton justu
    -Thus the difficulty of this jutsu, only kage and above can perform this.
    -If the user uses it in mid range, the intensive strength of the jutsu will cause him -30 damage, and if done in short range, the user dies.
    -As this powerful justu has been released, it causes the ground to remain charged and the user, nor the opponent will be able to use B-ranked or lower ground techniques, in the same and the next turn.
    -Can be taugh only by Dr. House

    ~Declined~ Where are the physical drawbacks of your technique? Can you simply do this jutsu and still be in full physical condition? Don't think that the 30 damage will do anything in this matter, it's pretty much useless as a restriction. Also, take out the last restriction in bold.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Tensa Zangetsu) - Heaven Chain Slaying Moon
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20 for fire jutsu
    Damage Points: 60 from fire blast
    Description: Ichigo's shrinks is a daitō (Japanese long sword) with a black blade instead. The cross guard has four prongs bent out to form the shape of the manji (which is the kanji for "ban," meaning "full", as in "full release"). The blade itself can endure even the strongest of attacks, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks. It can even withstand getting crushed by force. A short length of chain with a broken link at the end dangles from the base of the hilt. Tensa Zangetsu is a special blade forged in the hawk village with sacred methods that allow the sword to draw in natural energy at half the speed of a normal ninja. This only works when the sword is in one of the users hands and they state that they are doing so. The user is able to focus their charka into the sword surrounding it with fire charka, thought this fire turns to black due to the sword's effect. This fire increases the damage of basic kenjutsu by +20 damage. This lasts for up to 3 turns and can be used twice per battle. The user can swing their sword releasing this fire blast which will travel in a crescent shape up to mid range. This counts as one of the users moves per turn.

    Note: Can only be used by Ichigo Uchiha
    Note: Both fire abilities count towards the 3 moves per turn


    ||Declined|| No point in letting you suffer in wait, I figured.
    (Tensa Zangetsu) - Heaven Chain Slaying Moon
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20 for fire jutsu
    Damage Points: 60 from fire blast
    Description: Ichigo's shrinks is a daitō (Japanese long sword) with a black blade instead. The cross guard has four prongs bent out to form the shape of the manji (which is the kanji for "ban," meaning "full", as in "full release"). The blade itself is indestructible, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks from basic weapons. This wouldn't work on attacks such as lightning or wind as that would blast the sword out of the users hand. A short length of chain with a broken link at the end dangles from the base of the hilt. Tensa Zangetsu is a special blade forged in the hawk village with sacred methods that allow the sword to draw in natural energy at half the speed of a normal ninja. This only works when the sword is in one of the users hands and they state that they are doing so. The user is able to focus their charka into the sword surrounding it with fire charka, thought this fire turns to black due to the sword's effect. This fire increases the damage of basic kenjutsu by +10 damage. This lasts for up to 3 turns and can be used once per battle.

    Note: Can only be used by Ichigo Uchiha
    Note: Surrounding the sword with black flames counts as one of the jutsu per turn, lasts for 3 turns and can only be used once. It adds +10 damage to kenjutsu attacks that are used in short range.
    Note: When the user is drawing in natural energy through the sword they can't use kenjutsu techniques



    I've spoken with Roku and Izuna before reposting this to work it out.

    And at the above post, i pressed edit instead of quote and didn't realise so that's why it's last edited by me when roku has declined the sword ^_^

    ~Declined~ look at the bold part, does it mean you can block all the other elements? Or low ranked attack in the least?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kuchiyose: Hiraishin Mokuton Hebi) ~ Flying Wood Snake
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short/Mid/Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A snake interbred with cells from Hashirama Senju and cells from Manda. The snake is half the size of Manda with wood platelets for scales. It has the ability to use Wood jutsus. And it has wings allowing it to fly. Given its size, it is able to fly with the added weight of 3 people, of Orochimaru's build.

    ~Wood jutsus require the use of said jutsu, and count toward the maximum 3 jutsus per turn as per Rei's R&R
    ~Can only be summoned once per battle
    ~A direct hit with an S rank or above fire , lightning or slicing wind jutsu, or 2 direct hits from an A rank fire, lighting, or slicing wind jutsu are the only things that are able to kill the snake
    ~The snake flies at the speed of Pein's giant bird
    ~The snake can only stay on the field for 5 turns
    ~The snake can only be summoned once
    ~Can only be summoned by someone who knows wood, or has signed the snake summoning contract

    ~Declined~ I like the concept of this one, just take out the part about it flying. Also, make it that only an Orochimaru bio or a wood user can summon that snake (considering Oro was the one using the 1st cell for experiments). Lastly, take out the part explaining what it requires to kill it, that are many ways to kill a summon and it shouldn't be restricted to rank (and for a lol look at the bold part).

    _____

    (Senei Ta Jashu) - Hidden Shadow Million Snake March
    Rank:Forbidden
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:50
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Million snake march is a Ninjutsu technique that manifests a incredibly large torrent of snakes, which extend from the sleeve. Orochimaru can extend these snakes to attack a target. Once extended the snake can bite into the target to hold and bind them. Chakra can be infused into the snakes to inflict extra damages.

    Note:Must be able to summon snakes
    Note: Fire chakra causes a serious burn
    Lightning chakra causes paralyses
    Earth chakra creates a dirty wound and causes the opponent to become infected
    Wind chakra can inject air into the opponents body causing an air bubble in the heart

    Water jutsu thins the blood of the opponent causing them to become dizzy and disorientated
    Note: Can only be used twice
    Note: The snakes shoot out faster than a kunai is thrown
    Note: The have no special health and/or resistance, they are just snakes

    ~Declined~ many things wrong here. Why is it forbidden? I see no restrictions and no reason why it should be classified as forbidden. Check out all the bold parts, they need to be fixed (how huge is that torrent? Similar to the jutsu used by Oro when fighting the 9 tails? Infections and air bubble? One of those effect if left very vague and the other is an instant kill the moment the bubble reach the heart; which is unacceptable in both cases. Lastly, make it as fast as a kunai (even there's it's a bit far-fetched IMO)).
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    (Kuchiyose: Hebi Chakra Sen'yaku) ~ Summoning: Snake Chakra Infusion
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short/Mid/Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will summon a giant snake, the size of manda, and infuse into him upon summoning, a specific element of chakra (fire, water, lighting, ice, etc) of the users choosing. The wasp will then be able to use all of that element's jutsus, and carry that element's weakness, example, a wasp infused with fire chakra, will have a weakness to water.

    ~This jutsu can only be used twice
    ~Can be used with ANY base 5 element that the user knows
    ~The snake can only use a total of 5 jutsu
    ~To kill the snake, you must deliver either 3 C-rank techniques, 2 B-rank technique or 1 A-rank technique
    ~The snake's jutsus count as one of the users 3 jutsus

    (This is an already approved jutsu for my wasp contract, I just wanted one for snakes as well )

    ~Pending~ lmao, you left the word "wasp" everywhere in your jutsu . Work it out and I'll accept it.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Resubmitting:




    (Kaze/-sui konbo, doragon no maito)Wind/Water Combo-Dragon's Might!

    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:The user gathers wind chakra in their stomach and molds it carefully into cutting wind. The user will then perform 2 handseals and water will appear around the rim of his/her lips. The user then will release the molded wind chakra at their opponent through the water net around the rim of their mouth all in one creating a dragon headed blast. This creates a powerful wind/water combo that can wash away and slice almost anything it comes in contact with.
    Note: Can be stopped by a jutsu like Fire And Wind Blast Technique
    *May only be used twice*
    *No wind or water the next turn*
    *Can only be taught/used by Shade Dracova


    Bolded the changes. Feel free to change anything if necessary

    ~Declined~ When re-submitting, always quote the original jutsu so we can see the differences.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Jiton: Satetsu no Hashira) - Magnetism Release: Iron Sand Pillars
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The Third Kazekage creates two to four pillars of Iron Sand that can be set anywhere mid-range of him. The pillars emit magnetic waves that can cause metallic objects to be repelled away or attracted to them. The amount of redirection that the pillars can do is equivalent to the chakra put in.
    Restrictions:
    ~Only usable three times.

    ~Declined~ I don't want you to be able to create a pillar behind your opponent as he threw a kunai, making it come back to him and immediately stab him (considering the kunai may have just left his hand). Find a way to make it work considering this.

    (Jiton: Satetsu no Taihō) - Magnetism Release: Iron Sand Cannon
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The Third Kazekage creates a large circular ball of Iron Sand that forms by the Third Kazekage. He then brings it up and points it into a directoin and uses his magnetism chakra to repulse the ball of Iron Sand to crush the opponent.
    Restrictions:
    ~Only usable two times.

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Custom Summoning Contract
    Summoning Animal: Bengal Monitor
    Scroll Owner: BluePhenix
    Other Users who have signed contract: No one yet
    Summoning Boss if existing: Awaiting approval before submitting
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Awaiting approval before submitting

    The Bengal monitors are related to the lizard species. They prey on invertebrates such as beetles, grubs, orthopterans, scorpions, snails and ants, and vertebrates such as bats, frogs, fish, lizards, snakes and rodents. They can feed on dead animals too. The Bengal monitors are capable of rapid movement on the ground. Their strong claws enables them to climb and dig well, and they can also swim well and stay submerged for at least 17 minutes. On the ground, they sometimes stand on their hind legs to get a better view or when males fight other males. On river banks, the pattern on their body provides excellent camouflage. Bengal monitors also have keen eyesight and can detect human movement nearly 250m away.

    In the Narutoverse, all the abilities of the Bengal monitors are enhanced and they are able to speak human language. They also possess their own kingdom.



    I have permission from Riku to make the Bengal Monitor contract: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/con...11742&u2=39421

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Sage~ View Post
    (Weapon: Akai Kisaki) Red Queen
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short – Long
    Chakra cost: 30 (To Summon)
    Damage points: 30 – 80 (Depending on the ability used)
    Description:
    The Red Queen is a sword with a long handle and a lever coming from the handles guard. The user squeezes on the lever, and pours raiton/Katon chakra into the sword and throughout the blade. The user can then use the sword as a normal blade or use certain jutsu that involve the sword. The Jutsu depends on how much chakra is poured into the blade by the user.

    Note:Can only be used for 3 turns.
    Note:Can be put away during any of the 3 turns, but it counts as a jutsu used that turn.
    Note:Can only use twice per battle.
    Note:Cannot use other ninjutsu, besides those of the swords while wielding it.
    Note:Cannot use Raiton jutsu the turn after the blade is put away.
    Note:Can only be wielded by Nero bio's
    Note:Can only be used under the permission of ~Sage~


    (Akai Kisaki no jutsu) Red Queen Technique "C-rank"
    Rank: C
    Type: Offence
    Range: Short/Medium
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: 35
    Description:
    The user pours raiton chakra into the Red Queen And aims the tip of the blade towards the opponent, when the lever on the handle is released, a small lightning bolt, jolts from the tip of the blade and towards the opponent.

    Note: Can only be used when wielding the Red Queen.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.


    ~Both Approved~

    (Akai Kisaki No Jutsu) Red Queen Technique "B rank"

    Rank: B
    Type: Offence
    Range: Short/Medium
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 45
    Description:
    The user pours raiton chakra into the Red Queen, they then stab the tip of the blade into the ground. They then release the lever on the handle and the raiton chakra flows through the ground and shoots up from beneath the opponent.

    Note: Can only be used when wielding the Red Queen.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.


    ~Declined~ How did the lightning reached your opponent? Did it travel through the ground? Elaborate.

    (Akai Kisaki no Jutsu) Red Queen Technique "A rank"

    Rank: A
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    The user stabs the tip of the blade into the ground and swings the sword around in a circle, carving a circle about two meters from the users left and right. The user then leaves the sword in the ground and pours raiton/katon chakra into it, when the lever on the sword id released, a thick lightning/flame wall, shoots up from the outside of the circle that was carved in the ground and protects the user.

    Note: User has to clarify what element he uses.
    Note: Can only be used when wielding Red Queen.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.


    ~Declined~ not that I have anything against your jutsu restriction-wise, but I just don't see it. Re-work your description to make it clearer.

    (Akai Kisaki No Jutsu) Red Queen Technique "S Rank"

    Rank: S
    Type: Offence
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:
    The user pours raiton/katon into the blade and rotates 360 degrees in an instant and slices the sword towards the user. A giant Raiton/katon tornado is launched from the tip of the in a flash and goes storming towards the opponent.

    Note: User has to clarify what element he uses.
    Note: Can only be done wielding Red Queen.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: Can only be used once per turn the sword is summoned.


    ~Declined~ unless you've undergone a Yin Yang training, you can't channel two chakra at the same time. Also, didn't your sword channel lightning chakra only?
    I Edited and explained what was asked, hope it helps.
    (Akai Kisaki No Jutsu) Red Queen Technique "B rank"

    Rank: B
    Type: Offence
    Range: Short/Medium
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 45
    Description:
    The user pours raiton chakra into the Red Queen, they then stab the tip of the blade into the ground. They then release the lever on the handle and the raiton chakra flows through the ground and shoots up from beneath the opponent.

    Note: Can only be used when wielding the Red Queen.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.


    Yea it travels underground, about a meter deep, is that aloud or no??

    (Akai Kisaki no Jutsu) Red Queen Technique "A rank"

    Rank: A
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    The user stabs the tip of the blade into the ground and engraves a circle around the user. The user then leaves the tip of the sword on the ground and pours raiton/katon chakra into it, when the lever on the sword id released, a thick lightning/flame wall, shoots up from outside of the circle that was engraved into the earth by the sword and protects the user.

    Note: User has to clarify what element he uses.
    Note: Can only be used when wielding Red Queen.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.


    Is that a bit better?

    (Akai Kisaki No Jutsu) Red Queen Technique "S Rank"

    Rank: S
    Type: Offence
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:
    The user pours raiton/katon into the blade and rotates 360 degrees in an instant and slices the sword towards the user. A giant Raiton/katon tornado is launched from the tip of the in a flash and goes storming towards the opponent.

    Note: User has to clarify what element he uses.
    Note: Can only be done wielding Red Queen.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: Can only be used once per turn the sword is summoned.


    Only one element can be channeled into the sword at a time. Would i still need to undergo Yin-yang training?

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    Summoning Animal: Tuatara
    Scroll Owner:~Sage~
    Other Users who have signed contract:N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A
    A reptile native to my country, New Zealand.


    ~All declined~ Over weekly submissions, here's the link to your other jutsus submitted this week:

    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...postcount=4437

    Now don't come saying you posted them thinking they were still in the precedent week since you posted them before my post announcing the new week. Many if not all members don't wait for my post and simply submit them when a new week start.

    That week started on the 18th, and that is when you posted.

    You are hereby banned from this thread for 1 week of submissions. Your ban will be lifted on the 3rd of October.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom WEAPON Submission ♦

    hey...... m here for asking mods to approve my custom weapon




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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Doton: Younen) - Earth Style: Childhood
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: By performing the '' Bird '' hand seal, the user can freely extend any of his earth jutsu instantly and up to the maximum rank the user knows but it must be activated first meaning if the user didn't perform any earth jutsu this jutsu will not have any effect, the purpose of this jutsu is to increase length of his earth jutsu if somehow his enemy is trying to escape by jumping up the the user can extend it and still kill his target but however those jutsu got extend will not have any power increase, only the length will increase (maximum is 10meter long).

    Can be used 5 time per battle.

    ~Declined: Please make your description clearer. I like the idea behind it, but it's hard to figure out what your jutsu really does. Also, elaborate on the "length increase", will it expand in all direction? Can you bend it? Or will it simply expand in one direction while getting thinner?~
    (Doton: Younen) - Earth style: Childhood
    rank: B
    type: Supplementary
    range: Short - long
    chakra cost: 25
    damage points: N/a
    description: By performing the '' Bird '' hand seal, the user is allowed to freely extend any of his earth related jutsu instantly, this technique can extend up to the maximum rank but it must be an earth technique and this technique will not take place if the user didn't perform any earth technique beforehand , the purpose of this technique is to surprise his target as most enemy may try to dodge earth jutsu by blasting themselves up or backward so this technique can still kill them even though the escape. The maximum length that the user can extend his earth jutsu is up to 10meter long just like sasuke's lighting spear/blade technique. However this technique can't be bend or change the direction, the size of the technique that can extended won't have any size change just that its length will increase and others stays the same even and lastly this technique doesn't provide any power boost.

    Can be used 5 time per battle.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ This will undoubtedly cause too much trouble in our RP and is unrealistic. The general idea was good, but I fear you were too hasty when making it.

    New submission :

    (Aburame Hijutsu : Fujin Za-men Waza) - Aburame Secret Technique: Female Seed Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost : 30
    Damage : N/A
    Description: One of the rarest technique that was found and developed by Aburame clan, the user will order(without hand seal) his queen or female bug to lay a special chakra seed onto the enemy, the enemy won't able to see or even notice unless the enemy is a doujutsu user or high level chakra sensor , what does this chakra seed does is to absorb chakra from the enemy rapidly but it will only activate when the enemy perform jutsu therefore it is very hard to notice the lost of chakra because the enemy will assume that the lost of chakra is due to the technique he about to perform therefore lowing the power of the enemy technique, giving the user advantage to overpower easily. After 3 turn, the chakra seed will automatically explode into a cloud of chakra and this cloud of chakra will automatically form into shape of bugs(each seed explode can create about 50) and will attack the enemy this is to just distract the target for a short time.

    Each seed last for 3 turn
    Can be used three time per battle
    Can only lay up to 10 seed max(per female bug/queen bug)
    Can only be used again after one turn
    Able to lower up to 1 rank of the enemy jutsu(any type)
    The female/queen bug must be already on the target's body.

    ~Declined~ This jutsu makes not sense whatsoever. First, you make it sound like it's unavoidable considering it's "impossible" to see a bug landing onto you unless you have doujutsu. The part about the chakra being sucked unknown to the user needs to be severely changed. Ninjas are master in the art of molding and using their chakra. The best ninjas know how to use the exact amount of chakra for a jutsu without wasting any bit of it, hence your jutsu lose it's purpose considering ANY shinobi would know that their chakra is going somewhere else. The explosion is just the cherry on top. Lastly, the restrictions need to be worked on.

    (Aburame Hijutsu : Su-pa Ko-tingu Waza) - Aburame Secret Technique: Super Coating Technique
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost : 40
    Damage : N/A
    Description: This is advance version of '' (Aburame Hijutsu : Konchuu Ko-tingu Waza) - Aburame Secret Technique: Bug Coating Technique '' but 2x time stronger, the bugs will again release chakra out by itself, coating themselves with chakra instantly but coat of chakra will grow sharp spike all around which allows the bugs to spin in a rapid speed to kill the target or to simply drill off and vanish tiny/small stuff like sand, the bugs will also get power / defense and speed boost of 2x and can overpower or withstanding technique to up A rank(but if they get hit by S rank, the coat of chakra will just take the damage therefore the bugs will stay alive)

    Can be only used three time per battle
    Can only coat the same bug once and can coat any amount bug the user decide.
    Coating effect lasts for 3 turns before running out.
    The user cannot use any Aburame technique on the same round/turn once this technique is activated
    The user cannot use any S ranked Aburame technique for 1 turn whenever this technique is deactivated


    Likewise, please do point the mistake or the change i should make and if you are willing please do so by editing them, thank you ^^

    ~Declined~ I'm pretty sure some other Aburame on the forum submitted similar techniques recently.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Quote Originally Posted by wastedmonkey View Post

    (Onchou Kyou Buru-su) - Rhythm and Blues

    Rank: A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: This Genjutsu will affect the sense of hearing of the opponent. The user will hum in a low rhythmical beat which will bind the opponent who will hear it. The victim will feel their body moving to the beat and wont be able to move on their own free will. The victim will then be moving towards the source of the sound.

    Note: Cant be seen by Dojutsu.
    Note: Genjutsu last 2 turns.
    Note: No other Genjutsu until the end of the battle.
    Note: Can only be use/taught by WastedMonkey


    ~Declined~ You mean to tell me that by only make a sound, not even making hand seals or making visual or physical contact with your enemy, you could cast a genjutsu on him? Some jutsu similar in style were once accepted and they are widely know as one of the most OP on the site. Work on it.


    (Onchou Kyou Buru-su) - Rhythm and Blues

    Rank: A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: This Genjutsu will affect the sense of hearing of the opponent. The user first make 6 hand seals and then will hum in a low rhythmical beat and tap their feet to the beat which will bind the opponent who will hear it. The victim will feel their body moving to the beat and wont be able to move on their own free will. The victim will then be moving towards the source of the sound. This Genjutsu will only restrict the movement of the opponent. The oppenent will still see and feel what is happening around him.

    Note: Since its a sound base, a strong sound can cancel the humming and tapping of the user
    Note: This jutsu only affect the legs of the opponent, leaving him fully capable of performing hand seals.
    Note: Cant be seen by Dojutsu.
    Note: Genjutsu last 2 turns.
    Note: No other Genjutsu until the end of the battle.
    Note: Can only be use/taught by WastedMonkey


    ~Approved~ Added a note in bold.

    NEW ENTRY


    (Katon: Nenshou Honoo no Kōjin) - Fire Release: Burning Flames of Kōjin

    Rank: S
    Type: Defense
    Range: Close/Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will quickly make 5 hand seals and gathers their Katon chakra all around their body. They will then release it in a burst of hot flames in a short range diameter around him.
    Note: Can be use 2 times
    Note: No A-Rank and above Katon for 2 turns after use.
    Note: Can only be use/taught by WastedMonkey


    ~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

    (Raiton: Dendou Kadou) - Lightning Release: Electric Vortex

    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will make several hand seals(4) and gather a large amount of raiton chakra in both hands. Then releases 2 lightning vortex that will spin in a spiral and turbulant form towards the opponent.
    Note: Can be use 2 times
    Note: No A-Rank and above Raiton for 2 turns after use.
    Note: Can only be use/taught by WastedMonkey


    Somthing like this but with lightning instead of wind:






    PLEASE EDIT WHERE NEEDED


    ~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-26-2011 at 01:44 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Xanthe~ View Post
    (Satetsu o Ushi) - Iron Sand Bull
    Rank: B
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user creates a bull head with two horns on the front of it. The bull moves faster as it travels in a straight line. Once it reaches long-range, it won't move as fast however.
    Restrictions:
    ~Only usable three times a battle.

    ~Declined~ Poor description in term of restrictions. How long does it last? Does it charge forward then disappear once it reach long range?

    (Satetsu Supiasupureddo / スピアスプレッド) - Iron Sand Spear Spread
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user condenses his Iron Sand into a large cone, the first spear. The spear is then shot at the opponent. While travelling, the spear breaks up into many more spears of smaller volume. The end result is a few hundred spreading spears that are launched.
    Restrictions:*
    ~Usable twice.

    ~Declined~ Check the bold part. Make it a fixed number of spear and make it reasonable. If you want to have a spear big and strong enough to pierce your opponent, I'd say the original can only divide into 4 smaller spears.
    Satetsu o Ushi) - Iron Sand Bull
    Rank: B
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user creates a bull head with two horns on the front of it. The bull can only move in a straight line. Due to it only being able to move in one direction, it moves very quickly. Once it reaches long-range, it won't move as fast however.
    Restrictions:
    ~Only usable three times a battle.
    ~Lasts four turns.
    ~Loses form after being in long-range for one turns.


    ~Declined~ The restrictions don't make any sense? Why would it last 4 turns if it simply move in a straight line? Once it misses the enemy it's no good since it won't be able to turn back. Also, take out the part about it being able to move fast because it moves only in straight line, that also doesn't make much sense.

    This is the last chance you have with this jutsu, next time, I'm declining it for good if it's not acceptable.


    (Satetsu Supiasupureddo / スピアスプレッド) - Iron Sand Spear Spread
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user condenses his Iron Sand into a large cone, the first spear. The spear is then shot at the opponent. While travelling, the spear breaks up into more spears of smaller volume. The end result is four spreading spears that are launched.
    Restrictions:*
    ~Usable twice.

    ~Approved~
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-26-2011 at 01:47 PM.

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