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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Omori No Kei Go | The Weight of Strong Words
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short-Med
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    A special ninjutsu of the highest caliber that can only be done by those who have excelled in ninjutsu. The user takes out a scroll which he previously prepared by writing a text in Jõko Nihongo (Ancient Japanese) with Hiragana and Katakana scripts instead of Kanji. As he takes the scroll out and unfolds it in front of him in a semi crescent gesture, he claps his hands focusing chakra. He then performs 3 hand seals (Horse+Hare+Boar) and touches the scroll. His chakra takes the form of the Hiragana and Katakana caracters, glowing as light blue chakra constructs. These rapidly converge like snakes to the enemy, binding him like chakra chains, stopping him from moving. This jutsu has a more powerful yet more limited performing method: the user will take a smaller scroll (only slightly larger than his hand) with the same caracters and slam it with his palm on the enemy. The moment there is contact, the rows of Katakana and Hiragana caracters spread across the enemy's body as chains, resctriting his movement. Although highly faster and having no need for hand seals, this alternative method has the same binding strength as the normal method. This jutsu can be done to restrict anything solid, with equal strength regardless of size or mass.

    Note1: Can only use jutsu up to S-rank next turn
    Note2: Usable only twice
    Note3: Because of the dense chakra in them, the chakra bindings are as strong as elemental jutsu of the same rank
    Note4: User can't use other regular ninjutsu in the same turn
    Note5: The binding doesn't require user to maintain contact and lasts until broken or released
    Note7: Can only be taught by Scorps


    This is an old submission which i only maintained the name and revamped the whole thing (although Zen said to no resubmit, this is very very different from the previous technique so i'm submitting it as a completely new one but i'll still provide the quote to the previous one)

    ~Declined~ OP. From what I read, it seems like it'd take an immense amount of strength to break it (considered it's chakra based and not a simple scroll), or a Forbidden ranked technique considering it's as strong as S-rank elemental technique. Either re-word it if I misread something or lower the abilities. Also, you'll notice I made it Short-Mid range, keep it that way.
    Resubmitting: I worded it wrong, sorry. The scroll serves as a vessel to shape the chakra from the user in chain-like bindings shaped as the kanjis. When i said it was as strong as s-rank elemental jutsu i meant that it could only be broke by S-Rank or above elemental jutsu, unlike my other chakra based jutsu that are weaker than same rank elemental jutsu, but i reword it. I was just trying to avoid saying how it could be broken or released ^^

    Ninpou: Omori No Kei Go | Ninjutsu: The Weight of Strong Words
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    A special ninjutsu of the highest caliber that can only be done by those who have excelled in ninjutsu. The user takes out a scroll which he previously prepared by writing a text in Jõko Nihongo (Ancient Japanese) with Hiragana and Katakana scripts instead of Kanji. As he takes the scroll out and unfolds it in air in front of him in a semi crescent gesture, he claps his hands focusing chakra, performing 3 hand seals (Horse+Hare+Boar) and touching the scroll. The Hiragana and Katakana caracters, glow in a light blue color and rapidly converge from the scroll, like snakes, raging towards the target. As they reach the target, they wrap around it like chains and bind its movement completely. This jutsu has a more powerful yet more limited performing method: the user will take a smaller scroll (only slightly larger than his hand) with the same caracters and slam it with his palm on the enemy. The moment there is contact, the rows of Katakana and Hiragana caracters spread across the enemy's body as chains, resctriting his movement. Although faster and having no need for hand seals, this alternative method has the same binding strength as the normal method. This jutsu can be done to restrict anything solid, with equal strength regardless of size or mass.

    Note1: Can only use jutsu up to S-rank in the same turn
    Note2: Usable only twice
    Note3: Because of the advanced shape manipulation required, this jutsu can only be broken by equal rank elemental or regular ninjutsu or taijutsu
    Note4: User can't use other regular ninjutsu in the same turn
    Note5: The binding doesn't require user to maintain contact and lasts until broken or released
    Note7: Can only be taught by Scorps

    ~Approved~

    New ones:

    Genkotsu Namakemono: Sono Bukotsu Zou No Sochi | Lazy Fist: The Clumsy Stomp of The Elephant
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    One of the most dangerous moves in Lazy Fist but also one of the simplest. The user focus a big amount of chakra on his palms or foot and does either a strong double open palm trust or a full strong single foot stomp into the opponents upper torax sending him flying backwards. This disturbs the enemy's chakra flow and produces a deep, strong S-Rank illusion. This painful illusion makes the enemy feel as if his lungs and chest were completely crushed in the impact, making him unable to inhale or exhale. This produces a hipoxia-like effect, making the enemy start to feel lightheaded and dizzy, leading to complete loss of conscience. If the enemy looks or tries to feel his torax/chest he'll see/feel as if it was in deed completely crushed, making it hard to decipher/see through the illusion.

    Note: Requires Lazy Fist training
    Note2: Can only be taught by Scorps
    Note3: Impact stance can be used without limit but, if connected, illusion only works once
    Note4: Requires Genjutsu Mastery

    ~Declined~ While being able to make the opponent feel the pain of asphyxiation, it does not really affect him. I know we could get into a heated debate on the "mind over body" topic (believing so hard you're unable to breath, that you actually do stop to breath), but I will not accept Genjutsus that make you feel a certain emotion, and actually make it happen. It's a line I'm not ready to cross. I remember accepting jutsus that were somewhat close to that, but they were kept within certain boundaries.

    Genkotsu Namakemono: Sono Tonsou No Ranningu Panda | Lazy Fist: The Escape of the Running Panda
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    Perhaps the strongest of all of the Lazy Fist stances, this technique is a more advanced form of The Dance of The Drunken Haze, using the same Chu Gar (Southern Praying Manthis) stance with the same basic abilities but used to a much higher caliber. Using this technique, the Lazy Fist Master is able to defend any taijutsu or kenjutsu attack (be it elemental fueled or not, since the chakra coating protects his hands and forearms and up to A-rank), as well as up to C-rank small elemental projectiles like with the mentioned technique. However, upon simple contact with the enemy, the user induces an S-Rank Genjutsu by disturbing the targets chakra flow. This Genjutsu affects all of the enemy's senses, making him see the user disappear into a burst of bamboo leafs and hear him run away from the enemy. The enemy will even see and hear small signs of movement in the ground around him, further fueling the illusion that the user has ran with a full burst of speed away from him. This technique serves as the ultimate defense/escape for Lazy Fist Masters.

    ~Declined~ OP. I cannot accept a technique that allows you to defend against all taijutsu and kenjutsu techniques. Some of them are terrifyingly powerful.

    Note: Requires Lazy Fist training
    Note2: The illusion effect only connects twice
    Note3: Can only be taught by Scorps
    Note4: Requires Genjutsu Mastery
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-28-2011 at 10:46 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    [Raiton/Suiton: Saishuu Sabaki] - Lightning/Water Release: Final Judgment
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 100 [-40 to Black and Aquarius each]
    Description: This is a collaboration technique between "Black" the boss of crows and his wife "Aquarius of the skies" the queen of crows, generated by Black's strong affinity towards the lightning element and Aquarius's strong affinity towards the water element, by using both most of their chakra when they are summoned together side by side on the battlefield and on the user's command, Aquarius using her ability to utilize the water element without having to use a water source to blow a giant wave of water from her mouth, upon reaching the opponent the beam of water expands rapidly covering most of the area targeted with water [Meaning if it's used on a Mid ranged opponent it covers all over Mid range], while at the same time that Aquarius does this, Black utilizing his strong affinity towards the lightning element, being the most powerful giant crow that was ever born, he shoots a rapid stream of lightning energy along with the water that Aquarius is making at the shape of a crow made out of lightning energy that's so powerful that when mixing with the water wave it forces the water to take the same shape of the lightning stream, the aftermath of this technique is a Lightning/Water Crow that's on the same size as either of Aquarius or Black, towards the direction of the enemy.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~This can only be used by Aquarius and Black together not seperately.
    ~The major requirement of this technique is that Aquarius and Black to be already summoned on the battlefield with separated summoning jutsus.
    ~Because this technique requires a massive amount of chakra, both Black and Aquarius are unable to continue the battle due to the enormous chakra strain on their bodies, and vanish from the battlefield immediately.
    ~The user can't summon any Crow for 5 turns after the usage of this technique.

    ~Declined~ OP and you completely ignored the fact that it was forbidden. Where are the physical drawbacks from such a technique? Either make it so you need to give some of your chakra to your summon to do that jutsu (hence there'd be a reason to have drawbacks), or make it so summoning both these on the field leave you completely exhausted (then elaborate on the drawbacks). Also, take out the bold parts. On a more picky side, you say that your female crow shoots out a wave, then it becomes a beam that expand on impact...what is it exactly?
    [Raiton/Suiton: Saishuu Sabaki] - Lightning/Water Release: Final Judgment
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 100 [-40 to Black and Aquarius each]
    Description: This is a collaboration technique between "Black" the boss of crows and his wife "Aquarius of the skies" the queen of crows, generated by Black's strong affinity towards the lightning element and Aquarius's strong affinity towards the water element and a large amount of chakra released into Black and Aquarius giving them the necessary chakra to utilize this technique, and also by using both most of their chakra when they are summoned together side by side on the battlefield and on the user's command, Aquarius using her ability to utilize the water element without having to use a water source to blow a giant wave of water from her mouth that's equivalent in size to the water shockwave technique but shot directly at the opponent in the shape of a beam of water, while at the same time that Aquarius does this, Black utilizing his strong affinity towards the lightning element, being the most powerful giant crow that was ever born, he shoots a rapid stream of lightning energy along with the water that Aquarius is making at the shape of a crow made out of lightning energy that's so powerful that when mixing with the water wave it forces the water to take the same shape of the lightning stream, the aftermath of this technique is a Lightning/Water Crow that's on the same size as either of Aquarius or Black, towards the direction of the enemy, as both Black and Aquarius suffer a large amount of damage from this technique making them vanish from the battlefield leaving the user extremely exhausted afterwards.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~This can only be used by Aquarius and Black together not seperately.
    ~The major requirement of this technique is that Aquarius and Black to be already summoned on the battlefield with separated summoning jutsus.
    ~Because this technique requires a massive amount of chakra, both Black and Aquarius are unable to continue the battle due to the enormous chakra strain on their bodies, and vanish from the battlefield immediately.
    ~ No Lightning or Water jutsu higher then A-rank for the following turn, and S-rank the turn after.
    ~The user's body becomes extremely slower than normal after the usage of this technique as the slightest movements affect him greatly and his body becomes extremely weak for 2 turns after the turn this technique is used the, however he's able to perform the handseals as normal.

    ~Approved~ Added a restriction.

    (Arumiton: Arumi Modo) - Aluminum Release: Aluminum Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A [+15 to Aluminum techniques, +10 to Fire and Earth techniques]
    Description: The user gathers a huge amount of chakra into the center of his body and flowing his aluminum chakra into every cell of his body to activate this technique upon releasing all of his aluminum chakra at once, for this technique a set of changes into the users body occures, the user's skin turns into aluminum metal of dull gray color allowing the user to gain extra damage while using the aluminum techniques or elemental techniques that create the aluminum i.e. Earth and Fire elements, but unlike the iron skin technique the user isn't immune to attacks as it's sacrificed for faster usage of aluminum techniques as well as fire and earth elements, the user continuously releases his aluminum chakra through his body to maintain his form at hand, but at the same time the user has an advantage of being immune to genjutsu techniques techniques that of B-rank and lower due to the continous release of the aluminum chakra through his whole body and allows the user to know whenever he's under a genjutsu as if the user is attacked with a genjutsu the aluminum skin-like quality that the user gains with the usage of this technique slowly deteriorates with due to the suppression of the opponent's chakra into the user's body thus slowly stopping the continuous chakra flow that's used to maintain this technique, but the continuous release of the aluminum chakra has a major disadvantage that is the user can only use aluminum techniques because if the user changes his aluminum affinity he loses the control over this technique, as well as earth and fire techniques that are used to form the aluminum metal.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~This mode lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Only Aluminum, Earth and Fire elements are to be used within this form however this doesn't include non elemental ninjutsu and taijutsu.
    ~No genjutsu can be utilized while in this form.
    ~No Aluminum techniques at all for 3 turns after this mode is deactivated.

    ~Declined~ Restrictions are a bit off. When leaving a mode, you're supposed to feel the drawback from it's usage. Also, why wouldn't you be able to use Aluminum for 3 turns but still be able to use fire and earth? Make it +5 and +5 or +10 for aluminum and +0 for the others.

    [Katon: Kaen Karasu] - Fire Release: The Blazing Crow
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 100 [-40 to the user]
    Description: This is an advanced fire technique that's taught to the user by Blaze the legendary crow of fire and the most experienced crow in the fire release, this technique is given to the user after proving skilled enough in the arts of fire release and showing a sufficient amount of respect towards the crows, After the user forms a set of handseals (Ram ? Monkey ? Horse ? Bird ? Tiger) The user gathers a large amount of fire chakra into his lungs as well as inhale a large amount of air and mixes both air and fire chakra to create fire which is shot out of his mouth in the shape of a huge fire stream the same size as the "oil flame bullet technique", immediately the user using his shape manipulation to turn turn the fire stream as it's shot out of his mouth into the shape of a soaring crow of fire that's the same size as Gamabunta scorching the ground as it heads for the target and making a noise equivalent to 100 crows screaming as it's heading for the opponent, this technique becomes exceptionally powerful if used after a wind technique that's possible to merge with this technique making it a fire/wind combination, the crow of flames absorb the power of the wind as fuel and becomes larger than it already is, but after this technique is used the user's body becomes extremely exhausted due to chakra overuse.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~The user is unable to use fire techniques at all for the next 2 turns.
    ~This technique counts as 2 moves of the 3 moves allowed per turn.
    ~This technique puts a huge strain on the user's body in the following turns due to the chakra overuse the simplest movements puts a huge strain on the user's body and the speed of the user drastically decreases for the next 3 turns.
    ~Can only be taught by ~Crow~

    ~Declined~ As big as Gama? Now that's OP.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Katon : Purotekuto Fenikkusu No Jutsu | Fire Release : Protecting Phoenix
    Type: Forbidden
    Rank: Defensive - Attack
    Range: short(while attacking mid -long)
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: 100 (20 to the user)
    Description: The user gather great amount of his katon chakra,Amount can make a ship of chakra like the titanic ,As he has the chakra he channel the chakra into all his body parts ,Then as the technique that the opponent reach the user the user release all the katon chakra creating huge phoenix around his whole body the phoenix can protect him ,And also in the same time that it protect him it destroy all things on the short range,Also the user can either throw it towards his opponent or simply protect him self with it
    -Can only be used once
    -Can't use any technique at the same turn or the two next
    -Can't use any water jutsu at the same turn
    -must be a sage
    -must master fire and AACT
    -Can't use any customs on the same turn or the next
    -Can only be used/Taught by -Kamishiro-
    -Count as 2 moves
    - It makes the user very weak and very slow after it ,it makes him as half of his life and half of his speed


    Katon /Doton : Arma Demon No Jutsu : Fire Release/Earth Release : Iron Spiral
    Type: S Rank
    Rank: Attack/Defense
    Range: mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user gather great amount of his Katon chakra then he channel it to his mouth ,Then he keep it on his mouth and while that he gather great amount of his Doton chakra then He release the doton chakra making alot of earth spears but just up to 10 ,Then as the spears appear he throw the fire from his mouth and as the both the same rank they will combine with each other making spears of lava but it will become spears of lava as it reach mid/long range
    -can only be used 3 times
    -must master doton
    -must master katon
    -can't use any doton/katon technique at the same turn
    -can't use any katon technique at the next turn higher than B rank
    -can't use any doton technique higher than B rank
    -Can only be used/Taught by -Kamishiro-

    Genjutsu : Unchi Kaibutsu Raiku No Touhou | Genjutsu : Oh Crap , A Monster Likes Me
    Type: Forbidden
    Rank: Attack
    Range: short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: 100
    Description: The user gather great amount of his chakra,Then he transfer his chakra into his opponent's minde ,Making him think that he is alone in the joungle and in front of him a terrible monster and as the opponent see the monster ,The monster with his eyes make the user so afraid ,Then as he can't move as he is so scared ,So the monster rush towards him tilll he reach him then he eats him,While he is eating him the opponent feel all the pain making him not able to do anything nor moving ,Allowing the user to attacks him
    -can only be used once
    -can't use any genjutsu on the battle after that
    -count as 2 moves
    -the user will be so tired as it will take all of his concentration and it will cause a headache
    -after it the user will only move with his half speed due to the chakra that he used

    ||All Declined||
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ View Post
    Re-Submitting

    (Tekken No Suitaru): Style Of Iron Fist

    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 100 (-10 each turn it is active)
    Damage Points: N/A (-20 to the user when activating and -10 each turn it is active)
    Description: The user focuses incredibly high amount of chakra into his legs and arms so that his strength increases on the level that of Godaime Hokage Tsunade Senju. While in this state the user can´t use any Ninjutsu or Genjutsu. The user can use Tekken Techniques tho (will be submitted later if this style is approved). When the user leaves the state of Tekken, the user can´t move, he can only stand on 1 place and he cannot use any jutsus of S-rank and Forbidden rank. When the user is in the state of using Tekken Style, the user´s muscles are under huge pressure and cause him great pain.

    Notes:
    Can only be used once per battle
    Lasts only for 3 turns
    User cannot use ANY Ninjutsu or Genjutsu techniques when he´s using Tekken Style
    After 3 turns, the user can´t move from the place he´s standing because of muscle exhaustion
    No S or Forbidden Rank jutsus by the user for 2 turns after the Tekken Style has ended
    Can only be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~

    ~Pending~ Seems fine, but I need to know if it affects your speed in any way. Re-submit.

    (Zero Kelvin has permission to use this at the same moment as/if it gets approved)



    (Buzzard Kuchoiyse No Jutsu: Ra) Buzzard Summoning Technique: Ra

    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 100
    Damage: Depends on used jutsu (-50 to the user from too much chakra being used at once)
    Description: Ra is one of the two Buzzard elders in the Buzzard Realm. Unlike other summonings, Ra is the the strongest Buzzard known thus far. His sheer size and golden armor makes him look godly to those who don't know him. Ra's size is half that of Gamabunta but his wing span stretches past gamabunta's width meaning he could crush almost anything under him. He is actually worshipped as a deity to the low ranking Buzzards. Ra is capable of using "Killing Intent" to the degree of S-Rank where he shows his domination and killing intent over what he considers inferior beings causing them to be paralyzed with fear. Ra's best know ability is being able to use all lightning based techniques and the ones that require hand seals can be done by the summoner. The best part is that due to his sheer size it will seem like techniques reach a range longer. An example is that if he used Gian it would reach up to Long-Range (in other words if used jutsu is only up to Mid-Range, it would reach to Long-Range). The armor like feathers Ra has is sturdy enough to be unaffected by techniques of B-rank and below.


    Notes:
    Can be forced to be summoned back to it´s land if hit by 180 damage points
    Can only be used/taught by Migualon J.J.
    Must have signed the Buzzard summoning contract
    All his techniques are considered as 1 of the 3 techniqes per turn
    The user cannot use S-rank or higher techniques while Ra is on the field, but Ra can use S-rank Lightning Jutsus
    He stays on the field for 3 turns


    ~Declined~ No Forbidden summoning will be accepted. Using killing intend? No, enough problems were caused from members using that technique I won't allow summon to use it too. Summons can only use up to S-rank so fix that part. Extending range is OP. Take out the 180 damage part. If I hit it with amaterasu you can be it'll die.
    Re-submiting (again )

    (Tekken No Suitaru): Style Of Iron Fist

    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 100 (-10 each turn it is active)
    Damage Points: N/A (-20 to the user when activating and -10 each turn it is active)
    Description: The user focuses incredibly high amount of chakra into his legs and arms so that his strength increases on the level that of Godaime Hokage Tsunade Senju. While in this state the user can´t use any Ninjutsu or Genjutsu. The user can use Tekken Techniques tho (will be submitted later if this style is approved). When the user leaves the state of Tekken, the user can´t move, he can only stand on 1 place and he cannot use any jutsus of S-rank and Forbidden rank. When the user is in the state of using Tekken Style, the user´s muscles are under huge pressure and cause him great pain. It doesn´t change users speed.

    Notes:
    Can only be used once per battle
    Lasts only for 3 turns
    User cannot use ANY Ninjutsu or Genjutsu techniques when he´s using Tekken Style
    After 3 turns, the user can´t move from the place he´s standing because of muscle exhaustion
    No S or Forbidden Rank jutsus by the user for 2 turns after the Tekken Style has ended
    Can only be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~

    ||Approved|| Nice.


    (Buzzard Kuchoiyse No Jutsu: Ra) Buzzard Summoning Technique: Ra

    Rank: S
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra: 60
    Damage: Depends on used jutsu
    Description: Ra is one of the two Buzzard elders in the Buzzard Realm. Unlike other summonings, Ra is the the strongest Buzzard known thus far. His sheer size and golden armor makes him look godly to those who don't know him. Ra's size is half that of Gamabunta but his wing span stretches past Gamabunta's width meaning he could crush almost anything under him. He is actually worshipped as a deity to the low ranking Buzzards. Ra is capable of using Genjutsu up to S-rank. Ra's best know ability is being able to use all S-rank and below Lightning based techniques and the ones that require hand seals can be done by the summoner. The armor like feathers Ra has is sturdy enough to be unaffected by techniques of B-rank and below.


    Notes:
    Can be forced to be summoned back to it´s land if hit by 80 damage points
    Can only be used/taught by Migualon J.J.
    Must have signed the Buzzard summoning contract
    All his techniques are considered as 1 of the 3 techniqes per turn
    The user cannot use S-rank or higher techniques of different element than Lightning while Ra is on the field
    He stays on the field for 3 turns


    ||Declined|| Several things wrong with this. Incorrect chakra cost, All genjutsu and Lightning Jutsu up to S-rank as well as all of the other elements A-rank and below? no. Try again.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Taiketsu Yagami View Post
    [I]Resubmitting:

    "L.O.D Reach"
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack|Defend|Supplementary
    Range:Short (Long for ability)
    Chakra:N/A (+30 for L.O.D Flame Spike)
    Damage Points:N/A (60 for L.O.D Flame Spike) (-10 to water and earth ninjutsu)
    Description: L.O.D Reach is actually a full body armor that can be summoned through a seal tattoo on the user's back. The armor itself is made of a special alloy built to be light so that it does not effect the user's mobility. The armor itself has no special properties about it but it is capable of enduring small impacts that could come from normal punches, kicks, kunais/shurikens (small amount up to 10 at once), etc. that do not have special properties. When the armor is released, it is equiped with a lance and an oversized shield which each have different abilities and are connected to the armor.

    -L.O.D Shield: The L.O.D Shield has a special barrier made from 4 kanjis that are capable of blocking and dispersing incoming chakra based techniques with no definate mass up to A-rank meaning it can block any incoming jutsu with no particular solidness such as lightning, wind, fire, and other elements with no definate mass and can block anything up to D-rank, even other weapons with no particualr special abilities. The shield is practically big enough to cover the entire user's body so even full scale jutsus of B-rank wont affect him. The drawback of this technique is the user can't move while dispersing the technique making him vulnerable to other attacks and can't perform a technique of the same element in that turn

    -L.O.D Lance: The L.O.D Lance is an advanced piece of equipment built like a lance with a sharp point and a serrated edge so that it can pierce or cut through most objects with no very high density such as steel or iron. The lance is very adept in the fire and element and is linked to the user. Whenever the user performs a fire jutsu, the lance's white coating will turn flaming red. The user can channel fire chakra through this lance to add the burning effect of what it pierces or slashes. Its most famous ability known as "Flame Spike" is where the user channels fire chakra through the lance and expanding it. The user will look as if he is carrying a giant spear made of fire 4 times the size of the lance itself. This flaming spike can be shot at the opponent at very high speeds inveloping everthing it touches in flames while also having the piercing and destructive power to punch through concrete. (Equal to A-rank).

    Restrictions:

    ~Restrictions to L.O.D Armor:
    -The armor is unfit for earth and water ninjutsu so these techniques do less damage than normal
    -While wearing this equipment, the user is slowed in movement due to the heavy weapons but not drastically... ( I cannot match the speed of someone my rank who is a taijutsu specialist) Although, the user still keeps his reaction speed and the giant shield and spear make up for that.
    -Armor last 3 turns and can only be summoned twice in battle and the abilities of the armor do not reset when summoned again
    -Can only be worn by Taiketsu Yagami and who I let choose to wear it

    ~Restrictions to L.O.D Shield:
    -The L.O.D Shield is only capable of blocking and dispersing 3 techniques in battle and it only takes a couple seconds to do so depending on the size or power of the technique
    -the L.O.D Shield can't block incoming jutsus with a particular mass such as water, earth, or other elements with a definate mass besides D-rank
    -Dispersing of a technique counts as one of the user's techniques in a turn

    ~Restrictions to L.O.D Lance:
    -The L.O.D Flame SPike can only be used 4 times in battle
    -It counts as one of the user's techniques in a turn
    -The flaming spike last a full turn unless expeled from lance (Shot at the opponent)
    -While the Flaming Spike is in play, the only other technique that can be used is Flame Spike Gatling



    ~Declined~

    -A spear 4 time as big as the original? Shooting a fire spear? Re-read what I said last time I declined it. And the 4 times bigger is just OP, you'd be able to reach mid-range with a lance lol.
    -Summoning the armor twice for 3 turns? No. Make it once.
    -Also, restrict the lance to 2 times per battle.




    ]
    Im resubmitting the CW. If need be, I can submit Blue Autum as a seperate ninjutsu but is is connected to the armor like its other attacks til now. I just named it is all

    "L.O.D Reach"
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack|Supplementary|Defend
    Range:Short
    Chakra:N/A (+40 to activate a kanji)
    Damage Points:N/A(+10 to fire ninjutsu)(-10 to earth ninjutsu)
    Description:

    ~L.O.D Reach is actually a full body armor that can be summoned through a seal tattoo on the user's back. The armor itself is made of a special alloy built to be light so that it does not effect the user's mobility. The armor itself has no special properties about it but it is capable of enduring small impacts that could come from normal punches, kicks, kunais/shurikens (small amount up to 10 at once), etc. that do not have special properties. It may be a armor but chakra can still be channeled through it meaning the user can still perform ninjutsu and elemental ninjutsu although earth is weaker than usual. When the armor is released, it is equiped with an oversized shield and lance which has abilities of its own and are connected to the armor.

    ~L.O.D Shield: The L.O.D Shield is an oversized shield made from a very special metal that is built for absorbing virbrations and impacts. The shield also has a special barrier made from 3 kanjis around it's rim that are capable of blocking and dispersing incoming chakra based techniques with no definate mass up to A-rank meaning it can block any incoming jutsu with no particular solidness such as lightning, wind, fire, and other elements with no definate mass and can block anything up to D-rank, even other weapons with no particualr special abilities. The shield is practically big enough to cover the entire user's body so even full scale jutsus of B-rank wont affect him. The drawback of this shield is the user can't move while dispersing the technique making him vulnerable to other attacks and can't perform a technique of the same element in that turn

    ~L.O.D Lance: The L.O.D Lance is a very large/advanced piece of equipment. The lance has the piercing power to be able to punch through most things with no high density such as rock or metal. The special thing about this lance is that it is partly a containment unit filled with a special fire known as "Yama" that is of golden color only found in the buzzard realm and is capable of amplifying a fire based technique, not only making the fire become golden but increasing it's destructive power making it more solid and faster than normal fire but still having the burning properties fire has. This form of fire can slightly overpower a technique of the same rank.

    Restrictions:

    ~Restrictions to L.O.D Armor:
    -Armor last 4 turns and can only be summoned once in battle
    -Cannot perform genjutsu in this armor
    -Can only be worn by Taiketsu Yagami and who I let choose to wear it

    ~Restrictions to L.O.D Shield:
    -The L.O.D Shield is only capable of blocking and dispersing 3 techniques in battle and it only takes a couple seconds to do so depending on the size or power of the technique
    -the L.O.D Shield can't block incoming jutsus with a particular mass such as water, earth, or other elements with a definate mass besides D-rank
    -Dispersing of a technique counts as one of the user's techniques in a turn

    ~Restrictions to L.O.D Lance:
    -Theres only enough amplify 3 fire techniques in battle.
    -After amplifying a technique, the user can't use water in that turn
    .
    Base armor:



    ~Declined~ No special fire coming from another real. We already have enough fire variation.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Ichigo.. View Post
    (Yougan No Benihime) - The Red Lava Queen | The Lava Godess
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: Benihime is a special blade forged in the Iwagakure village with sacred methods which allowed the blade to look black because they forged it out of many volcano diamonds that is why it is black. The blade itself is indestructible, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks from basic weapons. Anything above a B-Rank attacks would hit the sword out of the users hand. If, benihime is unsheated it will cover itself with lava. This only works when the sword is in one of the users hands and they state that they are doing so. The user is able to focus their charka into the sword surrounding it with lava charka, though this lava turns to black due to the sword's effect. This black lava increases the damage of basic kenjutsu by +10 damage. This lasts for up to 4 turns and can be used once per battle.
    The abilities of this sword are quit simple: The use can release a small wave of lava from the blade but doing so they will need to add 10+ more chakra but this move can only be used once per battle and only if you're fighting a close range battle with your opponent.

    .Note: The user must have mastered Fire/Earth/Lava inorder to use this wepon.
    .Note: Only I Ichigo can use this sword.
    .Note: The user must be at Kage rank.
    .Note: This sword can only be used if your bio has the lava KG.
    .Note: Can only be used once per battle.


    Yougan No Benihime:

    Feel, free to edit any restrictions etc. if needed

    ~Declined~ Questions: you said the sword would fly off your hand if it's hit with a B-rank or higher, does this mean you can block B-rank and under with it? Also, you really need to give me a good description of the wave. Is it a physical wave (like a water wave) that rush toward your opponent or is it a shockwave of lava? Lastly, but the chakra and damage to work with the wave that's shot from the blade (if the wave is S-rank, 40 /80...etc). Make it +10 for the kenjutsu boost.
    The Red Lava Queen | The Lava Godess
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20 (+10 for the kenjutsu boost.)
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: Benihime is a special blade forged in the Iwagakure village with sacred methods which allowed the blade to look black because they forged it out of many volcano diamonds that is why it is black. The blade itself is indestructible, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks from basic weapons. Anything above a B-Rank attacks would hit the sword out of the users hand but, it can't block it. If, benihime is unsheated it will cover itself with lava. This only works when the sword is in one of the users hands and they state that they are doing so. The user is able to focus their charka into the sword surrounding it with lava charka, though this lava turns to black due to the sword's effect. This black lava increases the damage of basic kenjutsu by +10 damage. This lasts for up to 5 turns and can be used once per battle.
    The abilities of this sword are quit simple: The user can release a small Shockwave of magma (which is the highest form of lava and the hottest) from the blade but doing so they will need to add 10+ more chakra but this move can only be used 2 times per battle.
    The wave it self is a S-Ranked jutsu and it can be fired at Mid-Range.

    .Note: The user must have mastered Fire/Earth/Lava inorder to use this wepon.
    .Note: Only I Ichigo can use this sword.
    .Note: The user must be at Sage rank.
    .Note: This sword can only be used if your bio has the lava KG.
    .Note: Can only be used once per battle.

    .Note: Can only be used for 4 turns.
    Yougan No Benihime:

    ~Approved~ Made it last 4 turns and you can only use the blast twice.
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    (Yoton: Maguma Bakudan) - Lava Release: Magma Bomb
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage Points: 85
    Description: The user will focus his/her chakra into the surrounding lava on the battle field and form a ball with his/her chakra (size of a basketball). Then the user will compress it into a tiny ball (size of a golf ball) with his/her chakra, the user will do this two times and send it the opponent. Because its infused with the users chakra, and upon hitting the opponent it will explode into many lava droplets bevore the opponents face causing enormous burns and melting because of the lava.

    .Note: There has to be a lava source on the field.
    .Note: Can only be used whenthe user mastered Fire/Earth/Lava.
    .Note: The user must be at sage rank to use this jutsu.
    .Note: Can only be used twice per battle.


    ~Declined~ This concept as been done with each and every possible elements. Similar technique already exist.
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    (Yoton: Maguma Tatsumaki) - Lava Release: Magma Tornado
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80 (-10 Damage to the user)
    Description: The user will simply roatate his/her body and focus a large amount of chakra into the surrounding Lava on the field and keep roatating. In the proces he/she will create a F1 tornado made out of lava/fire and hot rocks. Afterwards the user will send it in the direction of the opponent. If it touches or even gets near you, it will inflict enormous damage to the opponent.

    .Note: There must be a lava source on the field.
    .Note: Must have mastered Earth/Fire/Lava inorder to perform this jutsu.
    .Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    .Note: The user must be at Kage rank to perform this jutsu.


    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist. Taking an already existing jutsu and changing the element doesn't make it a new technique, it's a rip off of the original.
    __________________________________________________ _______________
    (Raiton: Raikou Tsubasa) - Lightning Release: Lightning Wings
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will concentrate his\her lightning chakra into the
    shoulders and form the serpant handseal and release two wings made out of lightning, these wings are 2 meters long each. These wings are like a extension of the user and can be used for flight in battle. These wings have a very unique structure that makes it so the Lightning is very light but its still solid and so is able to allow the user to fly. It can also, block simple wepons like kunais, shurikens Etc.

    .Note: Can only be used if the user mastered Ligtning.
    .Note: This jutsu can be used 4 times per battle.
    .Note: Must be taught by Ichigo.
    .Note: The user must be at sannin rank or higher to use this jutsu.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist. Same as above.
    __________________________________________________ _______________
    Feel, free to edit any restrictions etc. if needed.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton: Mizu Furasshu)-Water Style: Water Flash
    Type:Attack
    Rank: E
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 5
    Damage Points: 10
    Description: This is one of the most unorthodox jutsus existing. Although most jutsus are strong for their high rank, this one is strong for it's low. By utilizing water-based chakra, user can create a small projectile (5 cm in diameter) with striking power no stronger than normal spear thrust. However, it's strength lies in speed of jutsu. Due to it's low rank and small amount of water needed, jutsu is created almost instantly and with it's high traveling speed it's trackable only by sharingan (1 tomoe and above).
    ||Declined|| To what extent can this jutsu damage?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Voldemort View Post
    (Meiton: Mei katana)Dark release: Dark Swords
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description:User creates two swords out of hardened dark chakra which can be either the user's own chakra or an opponents chakra.This can cut through Normal Objects but the user can only create two swords.
    Note:Last for 3 turns
    Note:Can only be used once per battle
    Note:The chakra can be used by either the user's or opponents

    ~Declined~ How could you use your opponent's chakra to perform this technique?

    (Meiton:Mugetsu)Dark release: Black Sky
    Type:Attack
    Rank:Forbidden
    RangeShort-Long
    Chakra Cost:50
    Damage Points:90(-10 to user)
    Description:The user charges large and highly compressed dark chakra which he then release into the opponent.This Jutsu is mainly pure dark chakra which the user then releases into the opponent as this Jutsu is wide it can reach nearly 15 meters long and 5 meters wide.
    Note:No Dark release techniques for 4 turns
    Note:Can only b used once per battle
    Note:Since the chakra is highly compressed and big it burns the user making -10 damage.

    ~Declined~ Releasing chakra into your opponent? First, how would that hurt him? Secondly, no jutsu that immediately take effect on the opponent will be accepted.


    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    RESUBMITTING:

    (Katon: Hiendan Jutsu) – Fire release:Hell Rising
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user focuses on his chakra which then he sends into the ground and then using that chakra he molds the chakra into thin layers of fire which he compresses so that he has the power to pierce through the ground,and once the user has done that he can control the chakra so that it comes shooting through the ground and this pierces the enemy.

    Note:The jutsu can only be used once per battle.
    Note:No fire Jutsu above A-rank for the next 2 turns
    Note: Opponent with Byakugan can see this,as they can see the chakra underneath them.

    ~Declined~ When re-submitting if you don't put the added part in bold, I won't check your CJ.
    _________________________

    Resubmitting

    (Katon: Hiendan Jutsu) – Fire release:Hell Rising
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user focuses on his chakra which then he sends into the ground and then using that chakra he molds the chakra into thin layers of fire which he compresses so that he has the power to pierce through the ground,and once the user has done that he can control the chakra so that it comes shooting through the ground and this pierces the enemy.

    Note:The jutsu can only be used once per battle.
    Note:No fire Jutsu above A-rank for the next 2 turns
    Note: Opponent with Byakugan can see this,as they can see the chakra underneath them.


    ||Declined|| Do Not Resubmit. (Similar Technique Exists)

    Dark release: Dark Swords
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:30[None if Used Opponents Chakra]
    Damage Points:60
    Description:User creates two swords out of hardened dark chakra which can be either the user's own chakra or an opponents chakra.This can cut through Normal Objects but the user can only create two swords.
    Note:Last for 3 turns
    Note:Can only be used once per battle
    Note:The chakra can be used by either the user's or opponents
    Note:The user must perform the Inhaling maw if he wants to use the opponents chakra.

    ||Declined|| Do Not Resubmit (Similar Technique Exists...mine to be precise)

    (Meiton:Mugetsu)Dark release: Black Sky
    Type:Attack
    Rank:Forbidden
    RangeShort-Long
    Chakra Cost:50
    Damage Points:90(-10 to user)
    Description:The user charges large and highly compressed dark chakra which he then release towards the opponent or anything he wishes.This Jutsu is mainly pure dark chakra which the user then releases into the opponent as this Jutsu is wide it can reach nearly 10 meters long and 5 meters wide.Since the chakra is filled with compressed and dense energy,the chakra then will have the power to burn the desired target.

    Note:No Dark release techniques for 4 turns
    Note:Can only be used once per battle
    Note:Since the chakra is highly compressed and big it burns the user making -10 damage.

    ||Declined|| Mugetsu. And come on, 10 by 5 meters? You can do better than that.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kokoro no Go-Ruden Ikazuchi): Heart of the Golden Thunder
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage Points: 20(If Blades are in contact with opponents weapon)
    Description:
    The legend tells it that these dual blades were created especially for the founder of Kumogakure in other words for the First Raikage,whos name up to this very day is unknown.Crafted by master blacksmith and given the ability to be infused with lightning chakra and none other then lightning.The hidden power of these Dual Blades can only be awakened in the hands of lightning expert.To be fully able to use the Blade's Power one must have fully mastered lightning release.Once infused with lightning the blades have fully increased their cutting power more then standard wind infused weapons.If these blades are used for blocking opponents weapons such as katana,swords,kunai etc. it will automaticly be electrified causing a shock to opponents body.If lightning jutsus are used along with these blades it adds +10 Damage to lightning techniques up to A Rank, techniques wich are S Rank have +5 more Damage.These blades have their very own lightning techniques wich need to be awakened by the user.Its been told that before First Raikages death he sealed some of his lightning chakra into the blades wich is why the blades have been given name Heart of Golden Thunder.Once in the hands of a true lightning master the lightning that is channeled into the blade takes on a much brighter form then normaly.

    Note: Lightning techniques wich are up to A Rank have their damage increases by +10, the ones wich are S Rank are increased by +5.
    Note: This effect can only be used three times per battle.
    Note: Lightning infusion lasts four turns.
    Note: Drains chakra every turn when effect is active. (-5)
    Note: Able to deflect one A-Rank and up earth techniques per battle(counts as users move).
    Note: Able to deflect two B-Rank and below earth techniques per battle(counts as users move).
    Note: Electrically Shocked on touch if not lightning specialist.
    Note: Can only be used by Zancrow.

    ||Declined||
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Gobi Gobletsson View Post
    (Doton: Ragu no Furue) - Earth Release: Quaking Runner
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplmentary/Offensive
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost: 15(-15 per turn)
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: When the user activates this jutsu, he will release small amounts of earth chakra into the ground everytime he takes a step, lands, runs, etc. By doing so the user will create minor quakes reaching from his location, and up to mid-range around him which will cause his opponent to loose balance, and leave him open. However when having this jutsu activated the user cannot use other elements than the ones that's based on Earth Release(Like Diamond.).
    ~Can be activated up till three times per battle.

    ~Declined~ I like it, a lot, but making it C-rank doesn't change the fact that it needs to be restricted in it's usage. I'll leave the details up to you. Also, a C-rank technique would cause quake, but nothing powerful enough to make an opponent fall to the ground when you walk. Mention that while it may surprise the opponent at first, and make him lose balance, he can very much adapt and prepare himself to keep his balance after the first quakes.
    Quote Originally Posted by Gobi Gobletsson View Post
    Resubmitting;
    (Bishamon-Mura) - War-Lots of Grass
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user will materlize a high amount of blades made out of chakra in the air, at the users desired location. These blades emit a distinctive and intimidating howling sound upon generation but despite the evident danger they possess from being suspended precariously around/above the intended victims, both of these qualities serve only to belie the technique's true nature. The attack's actual threat lies within its fragility, which results in the production of numerous razor-sharp shards that descend down at the target when disturbed by the foreign chakra(Opponent's), subsequently mincing the enemy to pieces. If one blade triggers, the rest triggers aswell.
    ~Can be use twice per battle.
    ~The Blades last aslong they haven't been destroyed.
    ~The blades would 'detonate' when foreign chakra goes through the air, past them, or jutsu being fired from target's location.


    Sorry but I didn't really get what you meant, as I think it's already stated in the next exluded the last bolded part. I just added that one, as I simply forgot to add in my first submission. How they're gonna be triggered is aswell already noted in the CJ description. So, to be honest I haven't really changed much, as I think it's already stated in the CJ description/restrictions. =S

    ~Declined~ My bad, I guess I didn't see the last restriction last time. However, one thing remain, are the blades visible? Generally, when manipulating raw chakra to the point where it's dense enough to harm someone, it's visible (example: rasengan). Re-submit with a good explanation and it's good to go.

    New;

    (Doton: Gurandoāsu no Kobushi) - Earth Release: Grand Earth Fist!
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damge points: 80
    Description: This is an mere advanced of Earth Fist Technique itself. By channeling earth chakra around the user's entire arm he will materlize a fist of earth around his arm. The user will dash/jump at the target at incredible speed. As the user gets into the range the user will slam the earthen fist against the target, sending them flying with high speeds. The fist is capable of sending a summon back.
    ~Useable twice.
    ~One turn inbetween usage.

    ~Declined~ If it's that big and powerful, how are you able to move at high speed with it? Or simply walk around with it for all that matters. To push back a summon you'd need a giant earth arm.
    I've dropped the idea of Sheer Will for now. I will figure a way to get it approved. O^O

    Resubmitting;

    (Bishamon-Mura) - War-Lots of Grass
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user will materlize a high amount of blades made out of visible chakra in the air, at the users desired location. These blades emit a distinctive and intimidating howling sound upon generation but despite the evident danger they possess from being suspended precariously around/above the intended victims, both of these qualities serve only to belie the technique's true nature. The attack's actual threat lies within its fragility, which results in the production of numerous razor-sharp shards that descend down at the target when disturbed by the foreign chakra(Opponent's), which would cause the swords to trigger and they will subsequently mincing the enemy to pieces. If one blade triggers, the rest triggers aswell.
    ~Can be use twice per battle.
    ~The Blades last aslong they haven't been destroyed.
    ~The blades would 'detonate' when foreign chakra goes through the air, past them, or jutsu being fired from target's location.

    ||Pending|| Not yet, Gobi. Please explain what you mean by "disturbed by the foreign chakra." How does one's chakra disturb the blades. Is it upon contact, movement, by being near the blades, ect.? You can PM the answer to me if you want.

    (Doton: Gurandoāsu no Kobushi) - Earth Release: Grand Earth Fist!
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damge points: 80
    Description: This is an mere advanced of Earth Fist Technique itself. By channeling earth chakra around the user's entire arm he will materlize a fist of earth around his arm, which he then will attack his target with.
    ~Useable twice.
    ~One turn inbetween usage.

    ||Declined|| Similar Technique Exists

    Removed some parts and added a new one. This does not mean he can go by incedible speed, I actually that to put some more fill onto the description in the start, aswell with the summon. .-.

    A little note btw;How would you like to change my Quaking Runner? I'm quite unsure, you want me to simply restrict it's usuage? Or like restrict what I can use while using it? Though I have added that I only could use Earth-related jutsus/elements when having it active. Also I took the rank out from the knowledge of Earth Shaking the C-ranked in the canon list, would it work if I put it to B-ranked then? (Yes I asked alot of questions there. .-.)
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Hayaton: Hayai Bushin no Jutsu) – Swift Release: Swift Clone Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user does a single hand seal and then creates a clone made from his Hayaton Chakra. Unbeknown to the opponent, this clone has explosion tags under his clothes. The clone then runs around on the battlefield with the speed of normal swift technique, while the user keeps the opponent busy. Then, when there’s an opening the clone will get close and let the explosion tags activate, blowing up near the opponent.
    Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
    Note: Can only be used twice
    Note: The user can’t use any swift techniques in the same turn and for 2 turns after this clone is made.
    Note: The clone lasts 2 turns, if he has not exploded by then, he will automatically explode.
    Note: Clone have the same Hayaton speed boosts as any other Hayaton technique

    ||Declined|| A bit much with the explosive tags. He's pretty much a moving, supersonic/hypersonic bomb.

    (Hyouton: Hyōten Hyakkasō) – Ice Release: Frozen Heaven Hundred Flowers Funeral
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user starts by performing one hand seals and summons a huge amount of Hyouton chakra, sending it into the sky. Once he has sent it in the sky, the chakra takes 1 turn to manifest in the sky. After this turn, a large opening is made in the air, spreading over the entire battlefield. As this is done, snowflakes start to fall down. The snowflakes start to freeze anything with what they come into contact, except for the user of course. Even allies can be frozen.
    Note: can only be taught by Wesobi
    Note: Must be in Daiguren Hyourinmaru form.
    Note: Using this technique will cause Daiguren Hyourinmaru form to lose 1 turn. (meaning that it has to be used on the first or the second turn when the form is used)
    Note: Using this technique will increase the strain on the users body when DY form wears off, increasing the turns the user can’t use Ice by 1.
    Note: This counts as one of the three on the turn used, not the turn it happens!

    ||Declined|| Zanji got this approved years ago, lol. Do Not Resubmit.

    (Hayatōn: Taibu Mueishō) – Swift Release: Greater Shadowless Flight
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive, Defensive, Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: After making a single hand seal goes into an advanced form of shadowless flight. Basically, the user condenses a large amount of Hayaton chakra inside of his body. The chakra inside of him makes his reactions faster as well as his physical speed, something for which Hayaton is known. Only a 3 Tomoe sharingan can perceive the speed while using this technique and react accordingly.
    Note: Can only be used by Wesobi
    Note: Can only be used twice
    Note: This technique lasts for 3 turns
    Note: The user can’t use any wind/lightning attacks in this mode
    Note: The user can’t use any other swift/forbidden techiques for 2 turns after this technique.
    Note: The user can not use this jutsu to defend in any way from another attack, this is merely meant for speed (meaning the user still has to block jutsus if the opponent can keep up)
    ||Pending|| Leaving for any other mod to check

    ~Declined~ Similar jutsu was submitted and declined.
     
         
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    (Kasai Herutsu) Fiery Heart
    Type: Supplement
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will rush into a fight going all out, doing their absolute best. The idea of this is from Rock Lee and Might Guy. The user will rush into the fight with twice their normal speed and a slight increase in physical capability. This is driven by pure motivation, will power, determination and adrenaline. The idea is that the user basically starts each fight giving it his all.

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    The White-throated Needletail (Hirundapus caudacutus), also known as Needle-tailed Swift or Spine-tailed Swift, is a large swift. It is the fastest-flying bird in flapping flight, being capable of speeds up to 170 km/h (105 mph).

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Black-Leg View Post
    THIS WEEK.

    Updating old custom(s):



    1. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Extra Haché ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Highest-rate Mincemeat
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60 (- 10 to user)
    Description: An user that knows Black-Leg taijutsu and has speed level of at least eight (speed chart) can, once taught, use Highest-rate Mincemeat. The technique includes fast footwork and will work only if the target's short or close range from the user. To begin with this technique, user must jump in air and once he/she gets close enough to the opponent, user starts delivering fast paced kicks aimed at mainly opponent's torso area. The technique isn't automatically 60 damage but can be less if the opponent is a taijutsu specialist and/or has sharingan to increase their reaction time that he/she uses to block the hits. Even the hits are blocked, the kicks will hurt. If not blocked, user can aim at opponent's vitals and cause quite alot damage by hitting opponent's internal organs and bones. If this is combined with Diable Jambe, the technique gains burning attributes. As long as user's airborne he/she can attack their target with more taijutsu but once user lands, he/she is forced to jump backwards and allow their feet to rest for a short period of time (the higher user's rank is, the shorter time is required for feet to rest).
    • Can be used only if user is properly trained and has speed level of eight and above.
    • Can be used twice per battle with three turn interval between each usage.





    2. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Armée de L'Air ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Air Force
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive - Supplementary
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: N/A (+ 40)
    Description: Air Force is a Black-Leg taijutsu technique designed for a counter attack or an opening. The technique itself is a chakra infused kick which takes form of 360 crescent kick. The kick itself is strong enough to send opponent flying away from the user. The kick can also be used to send allies flying into other ranges, though once a strong(er) kick is attempted user must spend more time concentrating before kicking. This can also be used quickly in openings to deal a quick hit to the opponent and then expose them for further combinations.
    • Can be used twice per battle
    • If you attempt on sending your ally to other range, the ally must jump on your leg just as you're kicking to guarantee the strength of kick to send him/her away.



    ~Both Declined~ If you're updating them, I need to know what you're changing. Either describe it in outside the jutsu or put the added/changed part in bold.

    New one:

    3. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Venaison Shoot ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Venison Shoot
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 60 (- 20 to user)
    Description: Before using this technique, one is required to have knowledge of how using Highest-rate Mincemeat and Diable Jambe. Combining these two attacks, Black-Leg taijutsu user is able of using a technique that is fatal on closer ranges. First, one must have activated Diable Jambe. After that the user jumps above opponent and starts spinning horizontally in a position where user's leg is pointing down at their opponent, he/she starts furiously kicking with one of their feet at opponent's chest and belly area as already activated Diable Jambe increases their strength. The kicks aren't dealing internal damage but are extremely strong and the places where hits are dealt can be seen through opponent's back as the user's ignited, glowing leg lands kicks on the target. After the spinning stops, user finishes with a powerful axe kick on the opponent's head/shoulder area which is strong enough to break stone. This technique is strong enough to deal considerable damage even to medium-sized summoning creatures.
    • This technique disables Diable Jambe after using (without strong cramps/leg strain to user that would come from Diable Jambe).
    • Can be used once per battle, and like after every fast paced attack, user requires few seconds to let their leg muscles relax.



    ~Declined~ Resubmit when "Higest-rate Mincemeat" is approved.
    ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Sugoi Keru Saiten ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Great Kick Festival
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 15 ( + 20 if used with higher speed )
    Damage points 60 ( + 10 if used with higher speed. - 10/15 to user )
    Description: User encases feet with chakra after he/she has achieved atleast 2nd gate's speed and jumps in air, at opponent. While being in front of opponent user will start kicking with great speed and deliver multiple kicks at the chest area of opponent. From the view of opponent it seems as if user would have multiple legs due the speed of kicks that land. After using this jutsu user suffers little damage and strain on legs.
    Note:
    - Can be used only once per battle
    - Requires speed of 2nd gate
    - User cannot run or use taijutsu at the same turn.
    1. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Extra Haché ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Highest-rate Mincemeat
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60 (- 10 to user)
    Description: An user that knows Black-Leg taijutsu and has high speed can, once taught, use Highest-rate Mincemeat. The technique includes fast footwork and will work only if the target's short or close range from the user. To begin with this technique, user must jump in air and once he/she gets close enough to the opponent, user starts delivering fast paced kicks aimed at mainly opponent's torso area. The technique isn't automatically 60 damage but can be less if the opponent is a taijutsu specialist and/or has sharingan to increase their reaction time that he/she uses to block the hits. Even the hits are blocked, the kicks will hurt. If not blocked, user can aim at opponent's vitals and cause quite alot damage by hitting opponent's internal organs and bones. If this is combined with Diable Jambe, the technique gains burning attributes. As long as user's airborne he/she can attack their target with more taijutsu but once user lands, he/she is forced to jump backwards and allow their feet to rest for a short period of time (the higher user's rank is, the shorter time is required for feet to rest).
    • Can be used twice per battle with three turn interval between each usage.



    ~Approved~ No reference to the speed chart will be allowed so I took them out. The rest seemed fine.

    ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Jetto Utsu ) - Black-leg Taijutsu: Jet Shoot
    Type: Offensive - Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short - Close ( Mid )
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: 35
    Description: User concentrates chakra into own legs through chakra circulation system. Once that's done user will pump his/her muscles and make a kick with user's right leg as user is standing on his/her left leg. The kick that's delivered is strong enough to send opponent or ally flying if it hits. When it hits it doesn't really cause much damage to opponent but it will send the opponent flying to longer distances than a normal kick would. This can be used to send ally flying at opponent or to avoid attack if other person jumps on the user's leg before he/she kicks. This will send the ally flying to mid range from user.
    Note:
    - Can be used twice
    - It takes few seconds to prepare the kick
    - User cannot move while preparing the kick.
    Example of the kick's strength:
    2. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Armée de L'Air ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Air Force
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive - Supplementary
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: N/A (+ 40)
    Description: Air Force is a Black-Leg taijutsu technique designed for a counter attack or an opening. The technique itself is a chakra infused kick which takes form of 360 crescent kick. The kick itself is strong enough to send opponent flying away from the user. The kick can also be used to send allies flying into other ranges, though once a strong(er) kick is attempted user must spend more time concentrating before kicking. This can also be used quickly in openings to deal a quick hit to the opponent and then expose them for further combinations.
    • Can be used twice per battle
    • If you attempt on sending your ally to other range, the ally must jump on your leg just as you're kicking to guarantee the strength of kick to send him/her away.


    ~Approved~

    New one:

    3. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Venaison Shoot ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Venison Shoot
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 60 (- 20 to user)
    Description: Before using this technique, one is required to have knowledge of how using Highest-rate Mincemeat and Diable Jambe. Combining these two attacks, Black-Leg taijutsu user is able of using a technique that is fatal on closer ranges. First, one must have activated Diable Jambe. After that the user jumps above opponent and starts spinning horizontally in a position where user's leg is pointing down at their opponent, he/she starts furiously kicking with one of their feet at opponent's chest and belly area as already activated Diable Jambe increases their strength. The kicks aren't dealing internal damage but are extremely strong and the places where hits are dealt can be seen through opponent's back as the user's ignited, glowing leg lands kicks on the target. After the spinning stops, user finishes with a powerful axe kick on the opponent's head/shoulder area which is strong enough to break stone. This technique is strong enough to deal considerable damage even to medium-sized summoning creatures.
    • This technique disables Diable Jambe after using (without strong cramps/leg strain to user that would come from Diable Jambe).
    • Can be used once per battle, and like after every fast paced attack, user requires few seconds to let their leg muscles relax.



    (jutsus one and two were completely remade with the same idea, but with better detail and restrictions)

    ~Declined~ Take out the part where you say it's fatal, no such jutsu will be approved. Rest seemed fine.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Hyouton: Kōri no sapuraizu | Ice Release: Ice Surprise
    Type: Offensive, Defensive, Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user channels a large amount of very dense, concentrated Hyouton chakra all over his body. Immediately as he releases it, a large amount of different shapes protrude from his body. Using shape manipulation he can make spikes, swords, maces, shields, hands and other ninja tools. Those tools can be made from any part of users body and they can also combine with Taijutsu.
    Note: Only five times per battle and once per turn
    Note: No Forbidden rank Ice jutsus same and next turn
    Note: Only McRazor can use this


    Hyouton: Aisu o takameyou | Ice Release: Elevating Ice
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30 (-5 for each turn)
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: While the field is on ice, user creates up to three stepping stones. They are about one meter in diameter and each of them can be shaped up to users free will. Using Fuuton chakra they can elevate the user really quick into the air and they can also catch the user if he is in free fall. They protrude from the ground very quickly and without warning. As Fuuton is already required for Hyouton there is no additional Fuuton infusion needed to make them levitate. They stay on the field until the user releases them. However, they can stay on the field only up to four turns.
    Note: Only three times per battle and once per turn
    Note: Stones last up to four turns
    Note: Only McRazor can use this


    Hyouton: Fubuki | Ice Release: Snowstorm
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: This technique is an advanced version of (Hyouton no Jutsu) - Ice Release Technique. User simply channels a great amount of Hyouton chakra into the clouds and makes a snowstorm. The snow is falling heavily onto the battlefield and it requires only one turn to completely cover the battlefield and serve as a resource for Hyouton jutsus. While the snow is falling, vision is drastically reduced and it's almost impossible for both, the opponent and user, to see each other (unless Dojutsu users). Due to his chakra being infused in each snowflake, user can sense every movement on the battlefield.
    Note: Only three times per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can use this




    Hyouton: Mizu no hentai | Ice Release: Water transformation
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: +20 to Suiton jutsu
    Description: After the user released a Suiton jutsu he immediately releases a Hyouton chakra wave. The wave is very fast and it catches up with the previous Suiton jutsu before it hits the target. It carries very cold air which freezes any body of water on contact. The air wave is cold enough to freeze water but still not enough cold to harm a living being (because the freezing point of water is 0°C). It doesn't require any handseals but it can't be used unless a Suiton jutsu is used previously. When the cold air wave freezes the water, its structure changes and forms into hexagonal prisms which make the attack solid. Due to the attack being solid it’s powered up for a whole rank. Note that an S-ranked Suiton jutsu doesn't become Forbidden but instead a very strong S-rank jutsu.
    Note: Can only be used after a Suiton jutsu is performed
    Note. Can only be used three times per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Hyouton users
    Note. Can only be taught by McRazor




    Tsuru Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Aoi Yūgure | Crane Summoning Technique: The Blue Dusk
    Type: Attack/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short (Long on abilities)
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The Blue Dusk is a big Blue Crane. This crane is pale blue-gray in color with a white crown, a pink bill, and long, dark gray wingtip feathers which trail to the ground. She is the queen of all cranes and a mastermind of perverseness. Her majestic looks contrast highly with her dirty mind. She has a wingspan of fifteen meters and can fly at high speeds with two humans on her back. Her main asset however is her agility and her Suiton chakra nature that both give birth to her abilities. While flying she is very quick and agile. Her chakra is constantly pulsing, thus being released into the field. As it gets released into the air it forms very little bubbles of water which are not able to be seen with a bare eye. As the bubbles get in contact with anything, they pop and immediately notify Aoi. This gives her the ability to sense anything that is happening on the battlefield up to long range. Due to her affinity to Suiton she can use it for both attack and defense. When attacking she exhales a high volume S-Rank spiraling stream of water, enough to flood most of the battlefield which can serve also as a water source for the rest of the match. When defending she creates a S-Rank spherical water shield around her and the user. She is also immune to water below B-Rank and fire up to B-Rank. Her jutsus count towards the three jutsus per turn.
    Note: Can use Suiton only four times per battle
    Note: Jutsus performed by the summon count towards three per turn
    Note: Her sensing ability doesn't count towards user's three jutsu per turn
    Note: Stays on field four turns
    Note: Must sign the Crane Summoning contract
    Note: Summoning Boss


    ~All Declined~ I will not accept any jutsu that use font, size change, aligned/centered text or spoilers for anything else then pictures. Re-submit in a more readable way.
    Thank you.
    Hyouton: Fubuki | Ice Release: Snowstorm
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: This technique is an advanced version of (Hyouton no Jutsu) - Ice Release Technique. User simply channels a great amount of Hyouton chakra into the clouds and makes a snowstorm. The snow is falling heavily onto the battlefield and it requires only one turn to completely cover the battlefield and serve as a resource for Hyouton jutsus. While the snow is falling, vision is drastically reduced and it's almost impossible for both, the opponent and user, to see each other (unless Dojutsu users). Due to his chakra being infused in each snowflake, user can sense every movement on the battlefield.
    Note: No S-Rank ice jutsus next turn
    Note: Only three times per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can use this

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    Hyouton: Mizu no hentai | Ice Release: Water transformation
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: +20 to Suiton jutsu
    Description: After the user released a Suiton jutsu he immediately releases a Hyouton chakra wave. The wave is very fast and it catches up with the previous Suiton jutsu before it hits the target. It carries very cold air which freezes any body of water on contact. The air wave is cold enough to freeze water but still not enough cold to harm a living being (because the freezing point of water is 0°C). This jutsu can't be used unless a Suiton jutsu is used previously. When the cold air wave freezes the water, its structure changes and forms into hexagonal prisms which make the attack solid. Due to the attack being solid it’s powered up for a whole rank. Note that an S-ranked Suiton jutsu doesn't become Forbidden but instead a very strong S-rank jutsu.
    Note: Can only be used after a Suiton jutsu is performed
    Note. Can only be used three times per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Hyouton users
    Note: Can only be taught by McRazor

    ~Declined~ Unrealistic. While it's true that water do freeze at 0 degree Celcius, large body of water won't. Only a thin layer would form over it. In order to completely freeze a medium-big mass of water, you'd need an extremely cold wave which would undoubtedly affect your opponent, and I won't accept such OP technique. Find a way to make it work.

    Tsuru Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Aoi Yūgure | Crane Summoning Technique: The Blue Dusk
    Type: Attack/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short (Long on abilities)
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The Blue Dusk is a big Blue Crane. This crane is pale blue-gray in color with a white crown, a pink bill, and long, dark gray wingtip feathers which trail to the ground. She is the queen of all cranes and a mastermind of perverseness. Her majestic looks contrast highly with her dirty mind. She has a wingspan of fifteen meters and can fly at high speeds with two humans on her back. Her main asset however is her agility and her Suiton chakra nature that both give birth to her abilities. While flying she is very quick and agile. Her chakra is constantly pulsing, thus being released into the field. As it gets released into the air it forms very little bubbles of water which are not able to be seen with a bare eye. As the bubbles get in contact with anything, they pop and immediately notify Aoi. This gives her the ability to sense anything that is happening on the battlefield up to long range. Due to her affinity to Suiton she can use it for both attack and defense. When attacking she exhales a high volume S-Rank spiraling stream of water, enough to flood most of the battlefield which can serve also as a water source for the rest of the match. When defending she creates a S-Rank spherical water shield around her and the user. She is also immune to water below B-Rank and fire up to B-Rank. Her jutsus count towards the three jutsus per turn.
    Note: Can use Suiton only four times per battle
    Note: Jutsus performed by the summon count towards three per turn
    Note: Her sensing ability doesn't count towards user's three jutsu per turn
    Note: Stays on field four turns
    Note: Must sign the Crane Summoning contract
    Note: Summoning Boss


    ~Declined~ Unrealistic on many levels. If they're small enough so they can't be seen, how could they possibly keep from popping from a simple natural breeze on the field? Or by simply interacting with the molecules in the air (because let's be honest, for something to be invisible to the naked eye, it must be pretty damn small). Also, why would Aoi notice it when the bubble pops? It might be connected to the bio, but please explain if you re-submit.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Ninja art: Blinding tag(Ninpou : Buraindotagu)
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: C-rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage point: 60
    Description: The user first throw a flash bomb, which has tiny pieces of explosive tags insied it at the target, which is added some chakra to make the flash stronger, and lasts longer. As the flash bang, the user use chakra and detonate the tags. This can be used together with another flash bomb to confuse the enemy, also with some flash bomb clone. If the ninja can escape before his eyes are blinded, the move will be considered as a failure.
    Notes:
    - Can only be learnt from Renges
    - A skillful player can easily combine them with other techniques.

    ~Declined~ While being creative, this is also unrealistic. The whole point of exploding tag is that it's related to the Kanji that burns on the tag, you can't put pieces of it in another form of tags unless you're creating a new type of tags. If you do, submit it as custom weapon and edit your bio afterward.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Inchato View Post
    (Hyoton: Reitō no Kami no Hari Chiryō)-Ice Release: Acupuncture of the Frozen Gods
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user touches his index finger to his thumb and focuses their ice chakra between them, and creates a needle made of ice. The user then focuses a great surge of ice chakra into the needle, and manipulates the shape of the needle to rapidly elongate in a straight direction at a high speed. The tip of the needle is razor sharp, and the ice it is made out of is dense. Because it is a needle and is very thin, if the needle were to be pointed at someone since it was created, they would have no way of knowing it was there, unless they had a doujutsu or some other chakra sensing ability.
    Note: After the needle is completely done elongating, it is very brittle, and can be shattered with relative ease, although, while it is elongating, the needle is very dense.
    Note: On the turn after this jutsu is used, the user is unable to perform S-Rank or higher Ice jutsu, due to the amount of ice chakra used to surge the needle forward.
    Note: Can only be used twice.
    Note: Only usable by Inchato.

    With the above jutsu, I'd like to point out that the ice is not transparent, and the needle would be fairly easy to see if viewed from all angles, with the exception of the view in which the viewer is staring directly at the tip of the needle.

    Declined. A needle that thin would be extremly brittle even while it was being made. if it is brittle when it has finished growing it should be brittle throughout the whole process since it cant bee seen then whole time.
    Resubmitting:

    (Hyoton: Reitō no Kami no Hari Chiryō)-Ice Release: Acupuncture of the Frozen Gods
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user touches his index finger to his thumb and focuses their ice chakra between them, and creates a needle made of ice. The user then focuses a great surge of ice chakra into the needle, and manipulates the shape of the needle to rapidly elongate in a straight direction at a high speed. The tip of the needle is razor sharp, and the ice it is made out of is dense. Because it is a needle and is very thin, if the needle were to be pointed at someone since it was created, they would have no way of knowing it was there, unless they had a doujutsu or some other chakra sensing ability. Although the needle would normally be very brittle due to it's thinness, however, by infusing their ice chakra in the needle, the user is able to reinforce the needle so that it is extremely hard for the duration of the turn it was created, however, it is extremely brittle on all turns after this, and can be broken by C-Rank and up taijutsu attacks.
    Note: On the turn after this jutsu is used, the user is unable to perform S-Rank or higher Ice jutsu, due to the amount of ice chakra used to surge the needle forward.
    Note: Can only be used twice.
    Note: Only usable by Inch.

    ~Declined~ I still think you haven't fixed the problem presented by last mod who checked your CJ. Adding chakra isn't always the solution, sometime we need a logic reasoning behind the technique.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Madara.. View Post
    (Meiton: Kura Denryū) - Dark Release: Dark Current
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: This jutsu allows the user to generate non-focused dark energy chakra from their body. Because the energy isn't focused, it doesn't kill on contact, instead it only numbs limbs. The dark chakra can be channelled through metal objects, as well as spread out into the air or ground.

    Note: Only 3x Per Battle
    Note: Can be channeled into a sword.
    Note: This technique works similar in the way Nagashi does.
    Note: Must Have Permission to use by Madara.. & Nagato..

    ~Declined~ Complete rip-off of Nagashi, try and be more creative next time.


    (Meiton: Shūshū ōbu) - Dark Release: Gathering Orb

    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary/Defense
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60 (+10 w/ Absorbtion)
    Description: The user uses both hands to channel a large amount of dark chakra into a dark energy ball that is released towards the target that absorbs the energy from fire and lightning techniques rendering them useless, but also making the dark orb highly unstable filled with so much energy and then it explodes.

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Blast radius is 5 meters in every direction.
    Note: Only absorbs S ranked or lower.
    Note: No Dark Release techniques for 1 turn
    Note: Must have permission to use by Madara.. & Nagato..

    ~Declined~ Elaborate on it's ability to absorb techniques, Kirin is S-rank, can it be absorbed? (I hope the answer is no lol). Try and develop on the size of the techniques it can absorb and the range of the explosion. Make it S-rank and restrict accordingly.

    (Meiton: Kurai Chakurasutaffu) - Dark Release: Dark Chakra Spear
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will condense their dark chakra condensing it into a thick 6 foot solid spear. It can be fired at high speeds, hitting the opponent within seconds and when it makes contact with the target or ground it will explode in a 6 foot radius of dark energy.

    Note: Can Only Be used 3x per battle
    Note: Can be split to strike multiple enemies.
    Note: Can be shot from the mouth
    Note: Must have permission to use by Madara.. & Nagato..

    ~Declined~ Enough with the explosive techniques, I feel every CJ I check can explode. Add hand seals.

    (Meiton: Chakura no kobushi) - Dark Release: Chakra Fist
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: A massive vortex blast of wind and dark chakra is released when the user punches that rips along the ground as it travels towards its target.

    Note: Only 3x per battle
    Note: It has the same speed and force as pressure damage.
    Note: It has enough size to wipe out a group of people standing together.
    Note: Must have permission to use by Madara.. & Nagato..

    ~Declined~ No only do you need yin yang release to mold 2 chakra at once, but now you're basically using 3 different chakras in 1 move.

    (Meiton: Kurai Chakurasutaffu) - Dark Release: Dark Chakra Spear
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will perform 4 necessary handseals channeling their dark chakra condensing it into a thick 6 foot solid spear. It can be fired at high speeds, hitting the opponent within seconds. It has enough strength and force to rip through boulders.

    Note: Can Only Be used 3x per battle
    Note: Can be shot from the mouth
    Note: Must have permission to use by Madara.. & Nagato..

    Removed explosiveness and added handseals sir


    ~Approved~ Took out the part where you can split it.

    (Meiton: Chakura no kobushi) - Dark Release: Chakra Fist
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: A massive vortex blast of dark chakra is released when the user punches that rips along the ground as it travels towards its target.

    Note: Only 3x per battle
    Note: It has the same speed and force as pressure damage.
    Note: It has enough size to wipe out a group of people standing together.
    Note: Must have permission to use by Madara.. & Nagato..

    Removed the wind, so now its normal..


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Just realized this jutsu is a rip off of a cannon wind technique.


    (Meiton: Shūshū ōbu) - Dark Release: Gathering Orb

    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Defense
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60 (+10 w/ Absorbtion)
    Description: The user uses both hands to channel a large amount of dark chakra into an unstable dark energy ball that is released towards the target that expands due to it being unstable absorbing the energy from fire and lightning techniques rendering them useless, but also making the dark orb even more highly unstable filled with so much energy and lack of compression and then it explodes.

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Cannot absorb technique as powerful as Kirin or Amaterasu
    Note: Absorbs the energy from techniques as big as Fire Style: Blaze ball
    Note: Blast radius is 5 meters in every direction, and if user is in short range of this technique he will have to defend from it as well.
    Note: Only absorbs S ranked or lower
    Note: No Dark Release techniques for 1 turn
    Note: Must have permission to use by Madara.. & Nagato..


    ~Approved~ Added a little something in the description.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Doton:chuusuien)-Earth Style:Appendicitis
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    RangeShort-Long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description:The user channels their earth chakra into the ground that shoots out of the ground in the shape of a needle. The needle, which has their chakra imbued into it makes contact with their opponents lower abdomen. The chakra then travels to targets appendix and then creates a disruption and causes a fecalith to block the appendix and resulting in the bursting of the appendix and appendicitis causing the target severe pain.
    Note:Can only be used twice, but if successful the first time can't be used again (A person only has one appendix).
    Note: Causes severe pain resulting in a 1-turn immobility.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~CoOkie Monster~

    ~Declined~ I hope you realize such precise description is meaningless since you can basically elaborate in your move, when using it, how it will affect your opponent. Now it just make it look OP. Anyway, back to business; where do these needles shoot from? Near you or near your opponent? I want details on the actual jutsu and less on the impact it'll have once it makes contact. As long as it's not killing your opponent (which I'm pretty sure you're implying when saying it'll burst his appendix) and deals a legitimate amount of damage, I need nothing more. (Hint; make it clear the result is not death if successful).

    (Katon:Tenka)-Fire Style: Ignition
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    RangeShort-Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: After the user performs the needed handseals, the user will take out a lighter and channel his/her fire chakra into the lighter and then using the sparks of the lighter can manipulate the spark to convert to a giant flame like a powerful flamethrower.
    Note:Each time the user spews a flame, a turn is used (1 flame = 1 turn. 3 flames = 3 turns). There is a pause between each flames allowing the opponent to react. If 3 flames are shot, each count as B-rank techniques, otherwise it's still A-rank.
    Note:Can only be used 3 times in total.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~CoOkie Monster~

    ~Approved~ Made it 3 times and added the bold part..

    (Katon:Sen)-Fire Style:Beam
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: The user channels their fire chakra into their arm. The user then releases the accumulated amount of chakra in one large beam of fire chakra. The beam is highly accurate and travels at a nice high speed at the target. The beam travels only in a straight direction from the users arm and cannot change midway. The beam dies out as it hits long range.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times
    Note: Cannot change direction at all.
    Note: No S-rank fire for the next turn
    Note: Can only be taught by ~CoOkie Monster~

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Iwabi View Post

    Permission has been granted by goro and he sent me also to a subcontractor scorps who hold the panda contract and he also gave permission ^_^

    Summoning Animal: Red Panda


    Scroll Owner: Iwabi
    Other Users who have signed contract: Zane Uchiha
    Summoning Boss if existing:
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:

    Note: Red Panda isnt actually classified as a bear though its been put into racoon and bear family it is actually in a family of its own being the Ailuridae
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Red_panda


    ~Approved~

    (Kuchiyose: Thor) - Summoning: Thor
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Thor is the King of the Red Panda. He is as tall as Ponta and he bears a large double headed war hammer that has been crafted from chakra metal which enables Thor to channel his elemental natures into the weapon for added power and he carries it on his back. he wields the hammer with his exceptionally large tail. He has an affinity for Lightning Element and Earth Element and can use the techniques up to what the user know's. He is capable of slamming his hammer onto the ground to activate the earth elemental techniques. He is capable of using the Killing Intent ninjutsu by simply inducing it by a roar. He is also the largest Red Panda summoning and due to his size he can travel across terrain quite quickly. He has thick fur that prevents him from being harmed by C rank and below Ice ninjutsu. He also has good hearing and a kean sense of smell allowing him to find hidden targets even when his field of vision is blocked.
    Note: Can only be used 2 times per match
    Note: Can only remain on the field for 4 turns

    ~Declined~ All summons will now be restricted to 1 element only. Boss summons can use them up to S-rank. Edit and re-submit.

    (Kuchiyose: Tapian) - Summoning: Tapian
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A (+10 to regular taijutsu and Kenjutsu Techniques)
    Description: The user will summon Tapian a red panda the size of Gamakichi. Hes not particulary large compared to the Boss summoning Thor but he is exceptionally fast and strong. He uses Fire elemental techniques up to the users rank, but he is more a taijutsu and kenjutsu user and can use the techniques that the user knows and due to his great physical strength he can increase the attacks by +10 damage. He wields his katana with his tail or bearing it in his mouth. Due to being a expect sword user he is capable of performing the silent killing technique with his sword which is a Odachi. Along with his natural gifts of hearing and smell which allows him to listen for the movement of the enemy and smell them out which aides in the silent killing technique useage when unable to see the target.
    Note: Can only be summoned twice and must wait two turns before re-summoning.
    Note: Can only remain on the field for 4 turns.

    ~Approved~ Made it 4 turns

    (Doton: Iwa Mage no Jutsu) - Earth Release: Rock Bending Technique
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: After performing the Ram hand seal the user manipulates their chakra into an existing peice of earth whether it a rock formation or the ground itself and cause a large snaking pillar to errect from that peice of earth. Although similar to some existing techniques it has a major difference in that it is more flexible in bending rather than being a solid object and can manouver around difficult objects. The user can use this technique for various supplementary and defencive manouvers.


    ~Declined~ Elaborate on the usage of this bendable rock and how it would not crumble under its own weight. Also, restrictions?

    Resubmitting the following:

    (Kuchiyose: Thor) - Summoning: Thor
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Thor is the King of the Red Panda. He is as tall as Ponta and he bears a large double headed war hammer that has been crafted from chakra metal which enables Thor to channel his elemental natures into the weapon for added power and he carries it on his back. he wields the hammer with his exceptionally large tail. He has an affinity for Lightning Element and can use the techniques up to what the user know's. He is capable of slamming his hammer onto the ground to activate the earth elemental techniques. He is capable of using the Killing Intent ninjutsu by simply inducing it by a roar. He is also the largest Red Panda summoning and due to his size he can travel across terrain quite quickly. He has thick fur that prevents him from being harmed by C rank and below Ice ninjutsu. He also has good hearing and a kean sense of smell allowing him to find hidden targets even when his field of vision is blocked.
    Note: Can only be used 2 times per match
    Note: Can only remain on the field for 4 turns

    (I have removed the second element making it useable of lightning element, and made it S rank)

    ~Declined~ Elemental natures? I hate it when people just chop a part of their jutsu and don't take the time to re-read themselves. Take out the killing intent part, don't know why I didn't mention that before. Summons won't be allowed to use that jutsu, it's already a mess with normal shinobis.

    (Doton: Shukushō Shitsu no Jutsu) - Earth Release: Shrinking Chamber Technique
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive, Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: A relatively simple technique where by performing the ram - tiger - horse hand seals the user is able to manipulate a chamber of earth and cause it to shrink thus reducing the space within so if an opponent is inside the chamber they could be forced into a tight enclosure and thus induce mental stress from the tightened space and could even cause the target to be crushed.
    Note: Can only be used every two turns.

    (Doton: Shitsu no kakudai no Jutsu) - Earth Release: Expanding Chamber Technique
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This technique is the opposite to the Earth Release: Shrinking Chamber in that it expands a surrounding chamber that is to small or enclosing on the user and forcibly pushing it outwards away from the user and thus creating space. For example techniques such as dessert burrial the user could use this technique to prevent being crushed.
    Note: can only be used every two turns.

    ~Both Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by -Haku Yuki- View Post
    re submitting

    hyouton: koori yoroi ( ice release ice armor)
    Type:supplemary
    Rank:A
    RangeShort
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: the user will make the hand seals tiger dog boar and focas his wind and water chakra to every cell in his body he will then make the tiger hand seal once more and relase the chakra the chakra will take a form around the users entire body in the form of armor ( like the armoir of the land of iron only made of ice) the armor is able to withestand fire up to A rank with out melting ( s rank or higer fire can melt this) the user is still able to preform hand seals but it is slower by 10 seconds. the user will not feel any big side effects from the ice jutsu due to his control over the ice.
    note: only lasts five turns
    note: no s rank ice /wind/water jutsu the turn after the ice armor wears off.
    note: user is un able to perform fire style nin jutsu while armor is on
    Note: can only use water wind and ice jutsu while armor is on
    note: can only block fire jutsus 3 times after blocking it 3 times the ice will melt off
    note: there are small openings in the armor ( the joints in which they arms leg etc turn) they can be broken threw with b rank of earth/ lighting or burnt with by fire ( if aimed right)

    ~Declined~ You didn't get what I meant when I said there were openings in the armor. It means that you aren't fully protected from the fire. A big enough fire could severely burn you even if you have your armor. Take out the restriction on the openings and make a new one. Lastly, this is only an A-rank technique, make it so it can block 2 A-rank fire before melting away, not 3.

    new

    genjutsu buriza-do ( genjutsu blizzard)
    Type:supplemary
    Rank:A
    Range: mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: the user will make 3 hand seals and send chakra signels into the enemys brain the enemy will belive that he sees snow falling after 2 turns the snow will become a rageing blizzard making the enemy think he sees a blizzard we will think that he is walking threw the blizzard blind making him unawhere of his surrondings ( as he has no idea where he is and would be wondering around blind as a bat)
    note: can only be used once
    note: can onyl be used by Haku Yuki-
    note: takes two turns for the jutsu to take effect

    ~Declined~ Fix the name (follow the official template) and fix the description. You're repeating yourself 3 times in it (look the bold parts). I know English isn't your first language (at least I hope so), but anyone can come up with a grammatically correct description, put some effort into it.

    Hyouton hogohi Koori disuku ( ice release protective ice disk)
    Rank: forbidden
    Range: long
    Type: defensive
    Chakra cost: 50
    damage points: n/a
    description: the user will make an ice disk ( which is a canon jutsu) and focus all his wind and water chakra into it making the ice more thick and strong the user will then place the place disk above him and then will make 5 hand seals and says kai ( thus releasing the chakra added into the ice making the ice expand) the ice disk will then grow in size so big it could be a protective shield cable of protecting against such a jutsu as deidara’s c4 clay doll ( the ice over the enemy and the user would grow as big as an entire village )
    note: can only be expanded to long range if over the user.
    note: can only be used twice
    note: after use the user cannot perform any ice, wind or water jutsu for 2 turns.
    note: must use ice style ice disk beforehand ( so this jutsu would take two jutsus up)
    note: after use user will collapse and will be unable to stand for 15 seconds due to the large amount of chakra expelled ( but can still move in general like I could still move my hands)
    note: can only defend against one jutsu per usen( but if a second jutsu hits the ice it will break but will weaken the jutsu heading at the user )
    note: can only be used for defensive purposes ( I can’t use this to extend a ice disk I send at the enemy )

    ~Declined~ OP. Also, same as above, fix the description.

    Hyouton Koori kasui no hayashi ( ice style ice spiked forest )
    Rank: S
    Range: long
    Chakra cost: 40
    damage points:80
    description: the user will make 5 hand seals and focas his water and wind chakra into the ice around the filed the user will make a sixth hand seal and focus his chakra up trees made of ice will rise and branchs made of spiked ice will come out from each one the user can make a single ice tree or a large amount of them the ground shakes as the ice comes up giving the opponent fair warning to dodge the only wall to dodge would be to go into the sky. Or use some type of fire to melt the ice before it comes up the only wall to dodge would be to go into the sky. Or use some type of fire to melt the ice before it comes up .note: can only be used once ( as it changes the battle filed into a forest of ice trees) the user can control where ever the trees rise up at.
    note: must have ice around ( like in order to use this jutsu to its fullest power you’d have to be standing on a frozen lake but a small ice source would work too but the tree would be small )
    note: can not use ice, water or wind Justus for the next 2 turns.
    Note: user will be very tired after use dulling his reaction time by 15 seconds

    ~Declined~ I can't even understand what's written. I'm sorry but I can't check those techniques. I've read your precedent submissions and they weren't as bad as this one. If you're not willing to put the effort of coming up with a clear and ENGLISH description, then I won't bother checking them.
    re submitting

    hyouton: koori yoroi ( ice release ice armor)
    Type:supplemary
    Rank:A
    RangeShort
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: n/a ( plus to taijutsu due to the ice)
    Description: the user will make the hand seals tiger dog boar and focus his wind and water chakra to every cell in his body he will then make the tiger hand seal once more and relase the chakra and the chakra will take a form around the users entire body in the form of armor ( like the armor in the the land of iron only made of ice) The special part about this armor is that where the joints are, the armor is made of movable snow so that his movement is not hindered. The armor is able to withestand fire up to A rank with out melting. ( s rank or higer fire can melt this) The user will not feel any big side effects from the ice jutsu due to his control over the ice.
    note: only lasts four turns
    note: no S rank ice /wind/water jutsu the turn after the ice armor wears off.
    note: User is un able to perform fire style nin jutsu while armor is on
    Note: can only use water wind and ice jutsu while armor is on
    note: can only block fire jutsus up to A-rank 2 times after blocking it 2 times the ice will melt off
    note: there are small openings in the armor made of snow ( the joints in which they arms leg etc turn) They are the weak spots of this technique but it would take precision to hit it.
    note: A strong enough fire jutsu can melt the ice and slightly burn the user ( a fire wind combo/forbidden fire jutsu or one a rank fire jutsu and then one s rank fire jutsu ) armor can only withstand one s rank then will melt off right after blocking it



    updateing this jutsu it was approved many pages ago by you izuna but i can't find the page heres the old version



    ~Approved~ Made it four turns.

    hyouton shimo hitonomi gekido ) Ice Release: Frost Bite Rage
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:S
    Range:Self
    Chakra Points:50
    Damage Points:N/A (+15 damage points to Ice techs and +10 damage points to taijutsu)
    Description: The user will release a large amount of water and wind chakra around him gathering all the moisture in the air of a 10 meter radios and cover himself in it. This will look like the user skin tone is becoming lighter til it becomes pure Bluish-white, which in turn raises his/her defense due to be covered in ice(Basically able to block shurikens and kunais without special properties). In this form all Ice techs released from the user are 10 damage points stronger and when he touch something, it causes a minor case of frost bite, making taijutsu more effective. the user is also able to make ice jutsu with one hand seal.the user can not nbe harmed by fire of c rank or below as the ice around him would keep him cold and not inurjied.
    Notes:
    -Can only be used once
    -Last 3 turns
    -No more ice abilities for the rest of the battle.
    -can only use ice jutsu and taijutsu while in this mode.
    -must be of the yuki clan
    ( the bold is the updates.)




    heres my new version

    hyouton shimo hitonomi gekido ) Ice Release: Frost Bite Rage
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:S
    Range:Self
    Chakra Points:50
    Damage Points:N/A (+15 damage points to Ice techs and +10 damage points to taijutsu)
    Description: The user will release a large amount of water and wind chakra around him gathering all the moisture in the air of a 10 meter radios and cover himself in it. This will look like the user skin tone is becoming lighter til it becomes pure Bluish-white, which in turn raises his/her defense due to be covered in ice(Basically able to block shurikens and kunais without special properties). In this form all Ice techs released from the user are 10 damage points stronger and when he touch something, it causes a minor case of frost bite, making taijutsu more effective. the user is also able to make ice jutsu with one hand seal.the user can not be harmed by fire of B rank or below as the ice around him would keep him cold and not inurjied. Notes:
    -Can only be used twice
    -Last 4 turns
    -No more ice abilities for the next two moves afterthe jutsu wears off
    -can only use ice jutsu ,water jutsu,wind jutsu and taijutsu while in this mode.
    -must be of the yuki clan
    notemust wait 3 turns before useing again
    note: no more water or wind style ninjutsu for the next two turns after jutsu wears off
    ( the bold is the updates.)

    ~Declined~ Stacking abilities aren't you? I don't know if it was me who approved it, but it's strong enough as it is. I won't make it stronger unless you drastically change it and take out some abilities to replace them with others.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    ( Katon: Kyousei Enko Hisaki ) - Fire Style: Great Arc Flames
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user raises his hands above his head and creates a large ball of fire in his hands , then the user smashes it into the ground . The ball of fire would explode outwards as a great blast of fire which rushes at the target upon impact with the ground , the user would be unaffected as it explodes outwards and towards the direction of the target .

    -Unable to use other katon jutsus during the same turn
    -Can only be used 3 times per fight
    -Can only be taught by Rokusho

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    ( Doton: Tengai Kasui ) - Earth Style: Dome Spikes
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user performs a single handseal to raise a dome of earth from the ground which imprisons and traps the target . As the dome forms , the user will perform another handseal which causes many spikes to protrude out of the inner walls of the dome which pierces through the target at every possible angle

    -Unable to use other doton jutsus during the same turn
    -Can only be used 3 times per fight
    -Can only be taught by Rokusho

    ~Declined~ Again, similar technique already exist.

    New Contract

    Summoning Animal: Kangaroos
    Scroll Owner: Rokusho
    Other Users who have signed contract: -
    Summoning Boss if existing: -
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: -

    ~Declined~ Contract already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal: Philippine Eagle
    Scroll Owner: battleandthebad
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing:N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A

    [i checked and it doesnt look like anyone has this species of eagle]

    ~Declined~ Eagles already exist, you need to ask the owner of the contract if you can make a branch family.

    (hitofuki) gust
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: gust is large philippine eagle [two people can ride on him with ease] he can use all cannon A ranked and lower wind jutsu plus any wind custom jutsu A ranked or lower the user knows he is a gentle and kind eagle who is very protective of his summoner he is capable of creating a sphere of wind around him and anyone riding on him that will proctect from B-ranked attacks [C-rank fire will destroy it and takes A-ranked lightning]
    -sphere counts as one of your jutsu
    -shpere can be done once per summon
    -gust can stay out for 4 turns
    -gust can be summoned twice per match
    -must have signed the philippine eagle contract to use

    (Kuchiyose: kumo) summoning: clouds
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: the user summons clouds from the Philippine Eagle home village these clouds change the environment allowing the eagle summons to use a special techneque that normally they can only use in there village each tech is different depending on the personallity of the eagle
    -clouds stay on the field until destroyed
    -can only be used once per match
    -must have signed philippine eagle contract

    [before you decline this jutsu please keep this in mind when naruto went to the toads village he asked why he couldnt just keep some of the oil on him so he could go into SM anytime and grampa toad said that outside there environment it would evaporate so the basis of my jutsu is solid in my opion also when i say enviroment i dont mean the field will change more like a the air will change slightly not enough for people to notice except maybe the inuzuka clan cause they have super smell]

    this is my first time submitting please let me know if ive done anything wrong

    ~Both Declined~ Contract wasn't approved.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Pain.. View Post
    Here are five more submissions since this submissions were last week.

    ( Hayatōn: Undoushinkei ken Handou ) Swift Release: Reflexes and Reaction

    Rank: D
    Range: Short
    Type: Supplementary
    Chakra: 10
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will focus swift chakra through out his whole body when the user finish this the user will clap his/her hand twice, the jutsu will immediately activate when the jutsu is activated it gives the user better reflexes and better reaction when on battle.

    • The jutsu can only be use on the first move on the battle
    • On the same move the user can't do any Swift techniques
    • Can only be taught/teach by Pain..
    • Must have a Swift bio to be use


    ~Declined~ This is not D-rank and the restrictions are off. How long does it last and how many time can you use it (if you take out the restriction about it being activated on the first turn).

    ( Hayatōn: Awai Mo-do ) Swift Release: Light Mode

    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user will do thirteen hand seals while doing the hand seals the user will focus swift chakra through out his whole body when the user finish this the user heart will boost up immediately and the user blood flow would be irregular the blood flow will also boost up. The user energy will also, increase and be amazingly great this jutsu also, give the user faster speed which only the well known Mangekyou sharingan and the Eternal mangekyou sharingan can track another thing that this technique gives the user is power it gives the user amazingly strength something alike Tsunade strength.

    • If the user surpass four rounds with this technique the user could easily die do to the heart beat rate
    • The user can't use more swift techniques for the rest of the battle
    • This jutsu is only usable twice per week
    • The user can't use wind and fire techniques while light mode is activated
    • The user cannot use Genjutsu techniques
    • The user can't use an a-rank and above technique while Light mode is activated if the user do so the user heart will stop beating
    • The user most know Swift to be use
    • Can only be teach/taught by Pain..
    • When the user time pass out the user will be extremely tired almost unable to fight and the user chakra will be almost out


    Whoever check this is free to edit anything..

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ This is grossly OP while being a rip-off of the gates and similar custom techniques.
    Hayatōn: Speedie | Swift Release: Speedie

    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: /
    Description: The user will focus a large amount of swift chakra on their hands and legs which would increase the speed of the user quickly as soon as the user finish that he does one hand seal which is the Tiger hand seal once the hand seal is done the user legs and hands will be even faster which would grant the user good speed for their hands and legs and it would be increase by the second.

    • Only usable once per battle
    • Last three turns
    • The user can't use any swift technique at the same turn
    • Only can be use/teach by Pain..


    ~Declined~ Re-read your own description. If you honestly believe it make any sense, read it again. I get that you want to increase your speed, but the rest is just nonsense.

    Mujitsu | Innocent

    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Self
    Chakra: 40 [+15]
    Damage: 80 [+15]
    Description: Innocent is a white sword it has a white heal and a long sword sign in the cold steel metal part. The sword was found on Konohagakure thought only people that have been chosen can use the sword, people that love peace and hate wars that is, of course if you love wars you wont go no where with this sword. The sword is really long thought is really light. The sword is extremely sharp which could also, put the user himself in danger that is if he don't know how to use the sword. The sword or just 'Innocent' is very freely meaning that you could able to swing up to the user speed. The sword has hidden abilities. It has been said that when the user activate Innocent powers the blade sign will start to shine on white thought not a big shine a little one which people could see clearly. One of the sword hidden power is lightning itself; when the user focus lightning chakra to the sword the sword will start to crack on lightning thought the lightning can't reach the heal of the sword another, ability is able to shoot lightning attacks; when the user focus lightning chakra on the sword and swing the sword the sword will make a giant lightning ball which destroys everything on is path the last, sword ability is a technique alike the 'Lightning ball ' that i stated on the sword thought this ability is much more stronger when the user puts the restricted lightning chakra onto the sword the sword will quickly start to shine on the sword sign once it shines the user swing the sword freely to the air and the sword will release a tense but really strong attack which will destroy everything on is path and kill the opponent if caught, the attack will destroy the ground and stuff alike, this last attack is like a forbidden lightning attack.



    • The second attack which is 'Lightning Balls' can be use three times on battle
    • The third and last attack can only be use once and once is use the user is only able to use one Lightning Ball
    • When the third attack is attack the user will have to put an extra 15 chakra to it which would make it a 55 chakra
    • The sword can only be use by Pain..
    • The sword is indestructible


    ~Declined~ I think I've been clear in the past week; no more swords shooting elements. It's been done hundreds of times and I'm not exaggerating.

    Hayatōn: Touchi | Swift Release: Flight

    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user will focus a large amount of swift chakra on their whole body once done the user will succeed and have great speed then, the user takes a kunai out and runs at the opponent and start to slash the opponent with the kunai at great speed which would led the opponent to death if he stay in the attack more than four seconds.

    • The user can't use a Swift jutsu on the same turn
    • Only usable twice per battle
    • Can only be teach by Pain..


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ OP.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal: Gaur
    Scroll Owner: Thunderbolt
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing:Jay Hog
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A

    Note:The gaur is the largest species of wild cattle, bigger than the African buffalo, the extinct aurochs, and wild water buffalo. The domesticated form of the gaur, Bos frontalis, is called gayal or mithun.
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gaur

    (Kuchiyose Jay Hog)summoning Jay Hog
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Jay hog is the king of gaur he is tall,strong and large in mass he has two frontal sharp horns which he uses as and added advantage during combact he has an affinity to fire and can use all the techniques the user can. he is also capable of rendering fear into the oponnent by simply roaring and pointing his horns towards the victim as a sign of anger,he has thick and well built body mass which allows him to withstand any d rank jutsu.He also has sharp eyes and good intellect which allows him to easily locate his opponent

    Note:Can only be used once per Match

    ~All Declined~ Not only are you double-posting, you're breaking the 3 jutsu per week rule.

    You are hereby banned from this thread for a period of 1 week (1 full cycle), your ban will be lifted on the 14th of November.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Doton: Yasumichuu Funkei)Earth style: enclosed Decapitation
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: This Jutsu can only be done on ground or where there is earth,the user make earth hand seals and focuses his chakra on hands and slamming palm to the ground bringing about 4 large enclosed rock pillars with Multiple sharp edges which quickly pierces the opponent heart and if not avoided and other organs thus leading decapitation and making the victim dead in few minutes. Can only be counter altered by a lIgh ning jutsu of a higher rank.
    Note:Can Be used twice in battle
    Note:The user must wait 3 turns to use again



    (Raiton: Dendou Omoi Chisou )Lightning Style: Eletric Heart feast
    Rank:A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: This user draws a massive amount of lightning chakra in his palm similar to that of chidori which takes the shape of a large like chakra mass but allows different rotator movements and is aimed for the opponents chest which when hit paralyzes the opponent from breathing and pumping blood and living the opponent dead in minutes. This jutsu can only be counter-altered by a wind jutsu of such rank or higher.
    Note:Can be used Once in Battle
    Note:Can only be taught by thunderbolt

    ~All Declined~ Look above.
     
         
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