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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    ban was up the sixteenth

    Aragante | Great Skull Emperor
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: a large, double-headed battle axe with a pair of rounded blades and a slit-eye pendant in the middle of its focal point. Despite it being roughly the same size as himself, the user can wieldwith a single hand relatively easily. just be swinging the blade, the giant axe absorbs their chakra and releases highly condensed chakra at the tip of the blade, magnifying the slash attack and then flies forward. This slash takes the form of a crescent moon or in the shape of a red wave.
    Note1: cannot absorb elemental chakra
    Note2: the blade can stay in play for 5 turns
    Note3: All abilities of the blade count towards the move count and don't require hand seals
    Note4: if the user is holding the blade, it doesn't count towards the 3 jutsu
    Note5: the abilities of the blade count towards the users three move.
    Note6: While holding the blade in his hands, the user can't channel lightning jutsu.
    Note7: The abilities of the blade can only reach short-range
    Note8: in order to wield the blade the user must have killed the previous owner. current owner : the fifth kazekage



    jiton: sakin kessu no jutsu | gold dust gathering technique
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This User gathers a great volume of Gold Dust and compresses it into a high-density shape. This greatly increases the hardness, creating a gigantic weapon[s] in an instant. The weight and size of these shapes are so great, they can easily shatter bedrock and break through most defences with one hit.
    Because the weapon is made out of Gold Dust , the shape can be whatever the user wants, and can even be changed during the fight. This allows the user to create the best weapon for the fight, by taking into account the opponent's abilities and the surrounding environment. Since the Iron Sand generates a strong magnetic field, the opponent cannot use any metal weapons or tools.
    Giant Spear: by forming the Gold Dust into a triangular, spindle-shaped object (much like a pyramid) and tapering it into a sharp point at one end, the user creates a giant spear. The pyramid can also spin like a giant top.
    Giant Hammer: by forming the Gold Dust into a large rectangular shape, the area of contact is increased greatly, creating a giant, hammer
    Giant box: by forming the Gold Dust into a large cylindrical shape, the user uses this to distract the opponent while the hammer or sphere attack the opponent
    Note1:can only summon two weapons per turn.
    Note2:every turn a weapon is still in use,that is -10 to the user's chakra
    Note3:the user looses 30 chakra points to reform a weapon
    Note4:can only be taught by the fifth kazekage and rexii ~
    Note5:can only be used by fourth kazekage bios~
    Note6:the user looses 20 chakra cost to change its shape during a fight
    Note7: only 2 weapons can be made at the time

    Suna Dai teitaku no Jutsu | Sand Mansion Creation Technique
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra cost:30
    Damage Points: none
    Description: A technique created by the first kazekage and renewed and refined by gaara. It Is said to be the jutsu that create the hidden sand. The User will preform the following hand-seals Snake → Rat → Ox → Ram → Snake and then sends their chakra into the ground, Then Breaks down the earth minerals in the ground to make more sand. The User Gathers the best possible mineral-rich sand and then constructs the sand into building, much like the ones in sunagakure.
    Note1: The User Can Only create One House per turn
    Note2: The User Must Wait one turn before being used again
    Note3: Can only create up to three houses
    Note4: The user can manipulate the sand to create sofas and such on the inside, and make things light or heavy to make comfy beds or steel bookcases
    Note5: Due to richness and hardness of the sand, only A-rank lightning can pierce
    Note6: The User can not use A-rank or above sand the next turn
    Note7: May Only be used by a gaara or a first kazekage bio
    Note8: may only be taught by the fifth kazekage

    -On hold. Edit the red parts to make them less OP-
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    1/16/12 -1/22/12

    Upgrading:

    (Bushidō) Way of the Samurai
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: N/A (See description)
    Damage: Zero
    Description: Samurai quickly learned that Ninjutsu would be a very dangerous weapon, and an incredibly difficult one to combat. But, they soon developed a countermeasure that helped them combat the ever-growing amount of Ninjutsu users: infusing their armor with their own chakra. By releasing their spirit into their armor (400 chakra), Samurai infuse their armor with special properties, dropping all energy based damage by 25% and all physical damage by 50%. Shinobi also quickly learned the power behind the spiritual armor and stole the technique. However, while it did indeed grant them *Once used, this technique is irreversible.
    *This technique only last for so long, regarding this formula: [400 – x], where “x” is the chakra cost of the jutsu that hits the user. The resulting value will continue to have (x) subtracted from it every time the user is hit. When the value being deducted is greater than or equal to the amount of remaining chakra, the jutsu will end.
    *Keotsu and those who know this technique whom he gives permission to are the only ones who can teach this.
    *Shinobi who use this technique lose their KG and the ability to use Ninjutsu and Genjutsu, leaving only Taijutus and Kenjutsu.

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    (Bushidō) Way of the Samurai
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: N/A (See description)
    Damage: +10 to Kenjutsu and Taijutsu
    Description: Samurai quickly learned that Ninjutsu would be a very dangerous weapon, and an incredibly difficult one to combat. But, they soon developed a countermeasure that helped them combat the ever-growing amount of Ninjutsu users: infusing their armor with their own chakra. By releasing their spirit into their armor (400 chakra), Samurai infuse their armor with special properties, dropping all energy based damage by 25% and all physical damage by 50%. This works by creating an invisible overshield of chakra around the Samurai’s body - specifically fortifying their armor-to help protect them. Due to the spiritual nature of this technique, harmonizing the Samurai’s life energies with their armor, and bringing the user’s Bushidō to the forefront of their mind, it also boost the prowess of the Samurai in battle.
    *This technique only last for so long, regarding this formula: [400 – x], where “x” is the chakra cost of the jutsu that hits the user. The resulting value will continue to have (x) subtracted from it every time the user is hit. When the value being deducted is greater than or equal to the amount of remaining chakra, the jutsu will end.
    *Keotsu and those who know this technique whom he gives permission to are the only ones who can teach this.
    *Only useable by Samurai.

    There was some confusion as to how this actually worked, so I elaborated on that. I also granted a small boost to Ken and Tai, as I removed completely that it as useable by Shinobi.

    -Approved-

    New:

    (Deddomanzubarēbōru) Dead Man’s Volley
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Defensive
    Range: N/A
    Charka Cost: 120
    Damage: N/A
    Description: More of a skill than an actual technique, Dead Man’s Volley is a “game” forced upon the user and the opponent. When a non-Doton technique approaches the user, they will focus a large quantity of chakra into their blade, creating an effect that causes the oncoming jutsu to condense itself into a sphere no larger than four feet across – however, as the jutsu is condensed, there is no loss of power, only area that it affects. However, the drawback to this is that the condensed energy is accelerated towards the user – thus initiating the game. The user can strike the energy sphere with their blade, causing the energy to rebound towards the opponent, also at high speeds; like the user, though, if the opponent has a sword, they can slash the energy orb to redirect it back at the user. The orb of energy can be reflected endlessly, until someone slips up, “losing” the game, and thus becoming the “Dead Man” as they take the full brunt of the energy sphere.
    *The user must have stated in their bio that they know the rules of “Dead Man’s Volley” to be able to use.
    *Once activated, this technique lasts the rest of the match; however, there are several stipulations, which are as follows:
    [1. Only one technique can be transformed into the “ball” for Dead Man’s Volley in a turn.
    [2. While a “ball” remains active until its round is over (that is, until the ball is destroyed), another “ball” cannot be added within five turns of creating one “ball.”
    [3. Dead Man’s Volley must be initiated by the sword-wielder.
    [4. The opponent is not required to wield a sword; they may chose to cover their hands in a chakra reflecting the nature of the ball to reflect it if they so chose; likewise, the user can "shield bash" to reflect the ball as well, but cannot use the hand method mentioned above.
    [5. Creating a “ball” counts as a move-per-turn, and costs 10 chakra.
    [6. The reflecting of the ball does not count as a move-per-turn, as it is an action forced upon both parties.
    [7. The ball has the same “power” as the technique that it was created from; therefore, if a ball has 60 power (crafted from an A-rank attack), and is struck by an attack with 61 power (an attack of equal or greater power), the ball is destroyed, and the game is considered a “draw.”
    [8. The ball is imbued with the properties of the technique it was created from; if the user failed to volley a ball crafted form a A-rank fire justu and was stuck, they would take the same amount of damage in from the ball as the technique used to form the ball would have inflicted.
    [9. A “ball” cannot be crafted from a technique whose power exceeds 120 (the chakra required to activate Dead Man’s Volley in a match.
    [10. With the very first use of Dead Man’s volley, it must be posted as a move, which subtracts the 120 chakra, the 10 chakra required for creating a ball, the move-per-turn of creating a ball, and the move-per-turn of creating a jutsu; therefore, the first time Dead Man’s Volley is used in a match, it has a collective chakra cost of 130, and two moves of a turn.
    [12. Due to the fact that the “ball” must have an energy-like, or semi-energy-like composition, earthen techniques (be it canon or CE) cannot be crafted into a ball. In fact, any technique that is “solid” cannot be crafted into a ball; the technique must be energy, gas, or liquid (i.e. Wind, Fire, Lightning, etc.)]

    I know the concept of "Forbidden Rank jutsu = self-damaging" but I've never seen a F-ranked Defense (nor can I imagine how it would harm one's self...), however, though this technique doesn't outright harm the user, there is a self-damaging aspect if the user fails to preform properly.

    -On hold. Edit the red parts-
     
         
    Last edited by ★ Rei ★; 01-28-2012 at 09:12 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    My one jutsu for Bakusaiga

    "Bakusaiga" Demonic Blessing of Taiketsu Yagami
    Rank:Forbidden
    Type:Attack|Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra:50
    Damage:N/A (+15 to chakra techniques such as rasengan that involve pure chakra)
    Description: The Demonic Blessing of Taiketsu Yagami is when Taiketsu releases all the chakra within Bakusaiga at once and channel it into his body. The over load of chakra causes Taiketsu to take on the demonic features of the Yama of which the chakra was taken from. While active the user's pure chakra techniques become enhanced and Taiketsu grows chakra wings with serrated edges not only giving him flight but having the ability to cut through rock. These wings are extremely durable also being able to endure the impacts of almost anything up to S-rank making the user virtually indestructable for a moment. Although while this is active the user is unable to use anything but taijustu, kenjutsu, and pure chakra techniques as the user loses the ability to swich chakra natures. The wings are very strong but they can only take so much as after being hit by techniques with the euivalent power of an S-rank technique, they brake off and disperse.
    Notes:
    -This mode lasts 2 turns
    -Must be used in the same turn as releasing the seal of Bakusaiga
    -After deactivation all granted abilities of Bakusaiga disappears and the user gets paralyzed through out his entire body
    -The wings cannot block cannon techniques such as amaterasu, Kirin, etc. (One hit killers that are unblockable or unavoidable)

    ~Declined~ Flight and invincibility (even for a short moment) are a very bad mix from my point of view...lol. Take both those out, we have enough techniques that grow wings already to make any new ones a rip off. About the invulnerability part, I think you know exactly what to do.



    Im updating the range on this jutsu to better suit the RP

    (Katon:kasai hitoya) Fire Release: Fire Prison
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage:N/A( +10 if they touch the fire)
    Description: This jutsu is used to trap a victim inside a virtually inescapable dome of fire. The user will gather his fire chakra in his hands, slamming them into the ground forming a spark of flames that travels to the opponent at high speeds and apon reaching 3 meters close to him/her, the fire expands into a ring around the opponent which then rises into a dome of fire trapping the opponent inside. Not only will this trap the victim but it will burn the oxygen inside so if the opponent doesn't escape in three turns, he will run out of breath and die.
    -Jutsu can only last for three turns
    -While keeping this jutsu active, the user can't use any other jutsu or remove his hands from the floor as the jutsu will cancel, although clones could make up for that
    -Can only be used or taught by Taiketsu Namikaze[/I]

    ~Declined~ How could such a technique get approved in the first place? Take out the inescapable part and I'll re-check it.

    "Bakusaiga"
    Rank:S
    Type:Weapon
    Range:Short
    Chakra:N/A
    Damage:N/A
    Description: "Bakusaiga" the weapon of legend that gave the holder the supposed power of a tailed demon. Whoever held this weapon would get a very dense chakra so ominous that they were put into legends and folk tales. Taiketsu Yagami found this sword and the truth behind it came with a tablet only readable by those combatible with the chakra. The sword's abilities actually come from a monster known as "Yama" A artificial chakra monster with chakra levels so dense and high, it was considered a 0 tailed beast. The Sage of Six Path's decendent was able to kill off the monster and seal his chakra into the sword while engraving a seal that allowed the chakra to mix with the person who held it if compatable. When the user releases the seal, they become infused with the chakra making them a monster in a sense by giving them demonic chakra with very high chakra levels.

    ~Abilities:
    -This sword syncs with the user making the user's chakra become very dense and demonic while taking on a green hue, increasing the power of non-elemental ninjutsu[+5] aswell as making all chakra based techniques to be equal to an elemental technique of the same rank.
    -The amount of chakra being channeled causes the user's chakra levels to rise substantually. (They can be considered a tailed beast without a tail like Kisame)
    -When a foreign object touches the user's chakra, they get burned in a similar manner to Naruto in his incomplete form since the chakra is so demonic.
    -The sword itself is virtually indestructable due to alloy it is made from and can stand very high temperatures.

    ~Restrictions:
    -While using this sword, the user can only use techniques that require creating the jutsu or element itslef since this chakra can't be channled into foreign objects.
    -The sword's granted abilities last 5 turns after activation
    -The user suffers in a similar manner to Naruto while wielding it after activation. (After 5 turns of using this chakra, the user's body begins to shut down starting with right arm, next turn left arm, next turn legs, and then next turn body making them completely paralyzed and in need of medical attention.
    -The user is limited to only two moves a turn while this is active
    -Can only be wielded by Taiketsu Yagami (Anyone else, the chakra would severly injure as it can't mix with theirs.)


    Owned by Taiketsu Approved
    My one jutsu for Bakusaiga

    "Bakusaiga" Demonic Blessing of the Crown Clown
    Rank:Forbidden
    Type:Attack|Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra:50
    Damage:N/A (+15 to non elemental ninjutsu)(-30 due to paralyzing)
    Description: The Demonic Blessing of the Crown Clown is when the user releases all the chakra within Bakusaiga at once and channel it into his body. The over load of chakra causes the user to take on the demonic features of the Yama which looks like a demonic Clown. While active the user's non elemental ninjutsu skills are amplified to the point where they can over power the same technique while still retaining the natural abilities of Bakusaiga. The sword itself turns into a claw around the user's left hand capable of leaving marks on dense materials and being able to channel the dense chakra as a medium. The user grows a chakra barrier that looks like a green mist 2 meter around his body (mist isn't thick enough to not see through it) that helps the user's natural instincts as the barrier acts as a substitute for sensory where the user can feel the disturbances and act accordingly. Even when attacked in blind spots, the user can still can still counter effectively. Although while this is active the user is unable to use anything but taijustu, kenjutsu, and non elemental ninjutsu as the user loses the ability to swich chakra natures.
    Notes:
    -This mode lasts 3 turns
    -Must be used in the same turn as releasing the seal of Bakusaiga
    -After deactivation all granted abilities of Bakusaiga disappears and the user gets paralyzed through out his entire body for 2 turns, and if able to survive, unable to use ninjutsu in general.
    -The mist can be blown away but will reapear after a turn


    -Declined. OP.-


    (Katon:kasai hitoya) Fire Release: Fire Prison
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage:N/A( +10 if they touch the fire)
    Description: This jutsu is used to trap a victim inside a powerful dome of intense fire. The user will gather his fire chakra in his hands, slamming them into the ground forming a spark of flames that travels to the opponent at high speeds and apon reaching 3 meters close to him/her, the fire expands into a ring around the opponent which then rises into a dome of fire trapping the opponent inside in a mere 2 seconds (the traveling time does not count in the two seconds. Thats just the dome forming). Not only will this trap the victim but it will burn the oxygen inside so if the opponent doesn't escape in three turns, he will run out of breath and die.
    -Jutsu can only last for three turns
    -While keeping this jutsu active, the user can't use any other jutsu or remove his hands from the floor as the jutsu will cancel, although clones could make up for that
    -Can only be used or taught by Taiketsu Yagami

    -Declined. OP. -


    Kei Sekken: Mubyoshi
    Rank:A
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Description: Kei Sekken Mubyoshi is actually a move created from witnessing 4 different martial arts and packing them together into one technique. When the user is grappled or very close to the opponent, they place their fist one inch from the opponent's body and perform a very swift, yet very strong punch capable of seriously injuring the opponent using the principles of Karate (moving the punching hand and the non-active hand at the same time as if "connected behind the back through a pulley"), Juijutsu (as if using a sword, by throwing ones body weight into the opponent to cut through a person),Chinese Kenpo (surpassing the limit of the mind with the feeling of sending your hand flying out), and Muay Thai (hit the enemy as if you're punching through him).


    -Declined. That's not a jutsu.-
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal: Blue Jay(Aokakesu)
    Scroll Owner: Toshiro
    Other Users who have signed contract: n/a
    Summoning Boss if existing: Suijin
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: n/a
    Wikipedia: Blue Jay

    Note: I checked this Thread, and this animal wasn't there when I searched.
    So I believe its available...


    - Summon approved -




    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb, and begins to slams both of his hands onto the ground to call forth Suijin the younger brother of the boss of the Blue Jays. Suijin is around half the size of Gamabunta, and can travel up to 100 miles per hour. What makes him unique is his incredible manipulation of the water affinity, from his birth he was training to master the water element, and after 5 years of training he has completely mastered the water element, a goal most cannot accomplish. Therefore he can use the water element up to A-rank techniques without the use of hand seals, in order to perform the water techniques. He also has thick blue, white, and black feathers that makes him immune to water techniques from B-rank and below. Whenever Suijin performs a water technique it gets enhanced by +10 additional damage points due to him using more chakra in order to perform the water technique required.

    - Can only be summoned once per battle
    - Stays on the field for 5 turns
    - Must have signed the Blue Jay contract
    - Can only be taught by Toshiro


    Note: If you feel anything small needs editing please edit, and I decided to post one of the summons along with the Contract for approval.

    -Approved-
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kaze Tamas)-Wind bullets
    Type-Offensive
    Rank-S
    Range-Short/Mid
    Chakra cost-40
    Damage-80
    Description:The user focuses his wind chakra down his arms and releases it out into his hands. He turns them into balls of highly compressed air. Which he can throw up to the mid range. Wherever they hit the blow up in a 5 meter radius releasing highly compressed air.
    Note:
    -May only be taught by ZoroOP

    (Tei Tsubasa)-Air wings
    Rank-B
    Type-Supplementatry
    Range-N/A
    Chakra cost-25
    Damage-N/A
    Description-The user uses his wind chakra and channels it around his arm. Then the user releases it slowly around his arm until it forms a wing of air around each arm each wing has a width of about 30 centimetres. These wings allow the user to glide in the air. The user may fly but with extreme difficulty and very clumsily.
    Note:
    -The wings last 3 turns
    -If the user tries to fly using them it counts as one of his jutsu
    -While in wing form you may not weave handseals or move your arms since they are preoccupied
    -May only be taught by ZoroOP

    (Kaze Bodi Ken)-Wind body blade
    Rank-S
    Rank-Supplementary
    Range-N/A
    Chakra cost-40
    Damage-N/A
    Description-The user manipulates wind chakra around theyre body so that they can turn in into armour. Any body part can be turned into a blade by channeling the chakra there. Once it has been channeled to the body part that limb receives the sharpness of a vacuum blade.
    Note:
    -The user may use this 3 times per battle
    -The user may only use it on one limb at a time
    -This technique lasts 3 turns
    -While using this technique the user make themselves more vulnerable to fire attacks
    -May only be taught by ZoroOP

    -Declined. Almost identical jutsus already exist-
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Fuuton: Kyōfū-Ryoku) - Wind Release: Gale Force
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+10 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A (+20 to water jutsu up to A-rank)
    Description: An adaptable field of wind chakra is created around the user that is completely transparent except for a pattern of swirls moving across it. At will, the user can release continuous streams of wind from the field in any direction which gives this technique many possible uses. Depending on where the wind is released it can be used to hover over the ground, keep back enemies and attacks, or help increase the speed at which the user travels. Another advatage to this technique is that while wind is being released from the field and a projectile or jutsu from the user is sent through it, the projectile will suddenly accelerate until it leaves the range of the wind. If this is done using a water jutsu, the wind will be combined with and enhanced by the water which increases its power by one rank. An S-rank jutsu would not increase in rank but would still be combined with wind.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -Lasts for 4 turns
    -While active, no fire or lightning techniques may be used
    -A B-rank fire technique can burn up the field and any wind coming from it

    ±± Declined ±± too many abilities stacked in it. Look at the bolded part. Accelerating all projectiles and weapons? A bit too much. Also, 4 turns is way too long for this. Tone it down and remove some of the abilities.

    Updating an old custom from this:
    (Katon: Afutābānā)- Fire Style: Afterburner
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user clasps his hands together and creates a circular mark in the palm of each hand that emit powerful jets of flame that can propell the user for a total of 5 seconds. The jutsu's timing and jet power are controlled by the user. They can get the user to a target at mid range in 2.5 seconds.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -Can only be taught by Katonpwnz

    To this:

    (Katon: Afutābānā)- Fire Style: Afterburner
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user clasps his hands together and concentrates fire chakra in his palms to create a circular mark on each of them. These marks emit powerful jets of flame that can propell the user much faster than a ninja can run. The power of the jets can be controlled they may be deactivated and reactivated at will.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -Lasts for 4 turns

    ±± Declined ±± 4 turns? why? you do understand that if you actually have this activated for 4 turns you can't do hand seals or use your hands right? Also, when you mean propel, do you mean fly?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Mizu watatsumi hogosha) Water Style: Sea Guardian:Eden
    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Mid-Long
    Type:Attack
    Chakra Cost:50
    Chakra Damage:90
    Description: The user does 5hand seals. Once Done A huge Human like Creature Emerges from the water. This Creature can spit out Water as if its saliva and can fight physically but can not move from the spot it was summon. The water Saliva is similar to A rank water and Can crush rocks with ease from the force of the saliva water. And He is Very strong

    -Only stays on the battle for 3turns
    -Cant use No water throughout the whole battle no more
    -Cant use Nin/tai/Gen while He is active
    -Must be summoned in a HUGE water source
    -Only Taught by Teno757

    ±± Declined ±± Many similar techniques already exist. Also, why is it forbidden? A forbidden rank techniques does damage to the user...Thats what makes it forbidden.

    1:04 (the white one. is how he looks and the same height)


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    (senzai ze Oden)Ninja Art: Garden Of Eden
    Rank:Forbidden
    Type: Defensive
    Range:Mid
    Chakra Cost:60
    Chakra Damage: N/a
    Description: The User Does 3handseals Ending with Tiger . The user will then release their chakra into the ground Making a white garden appear around and over the user and anybody who is in mid range of them. The garden is infused with the user chakra So simply cant be burned. This garden is specifically made to defend off against forbidden rank techs.

    -Can only use Once
    -The Garden Stays in affect for 2 turns
    -Once using this jutsu. No Ninjutsu can be used for 5turns
    -Due to huge scale of jutsu. You take a 5sec strain
    -Only taught by Teno757



    ±± Declined ±± Again, why is this forbidden? Also, chakra info is wrong. check the first post of this thread. And, a technique like this would fall under mokuton techniques unless you actually make it so that it produces a forest made of something other than Wood.

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    (Burakku kichigai)Black Madness
    Type:Weapon
    Rank:S
    Range:Short:Mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Chakra Damage:80
    Description:This Weapon is different from the rest. This Weapon has to be formed as. It appears as two spiked half-rings attached to the users shoulders. The User then Say the words "Black Madness Slide", The Half rings on his shoulders then slides down his arms, The user then claps his hands together, Causing the half rings to form a complete circle. When the circle is complete, two enormous blades materialize on either side of the ring. This Weapon Always stay with the user as its like a part of its clothing. Black Madness Activates Once The words are Called. This Weapon Can Spin at a very fast rate Causing it to look like a Massive Buzz Saw. Spikes appear on the handle of this weapon when somebody else picks it up other then its desired owner. With the same Chakra pattern. If the chakra pattern is different or Someone elses the spikes emit. . This Weapon Main Ability Is to spin at a fast rate and can be thrown at the enemy. The User Rotates the blade at a VERY high Speed using his/her chakra. Once it starts spinning real fast. It Gets Wind Nature Abilities. The user also does not need to hold the Weapon once it starts spinning, But Can control it with their chakra. This Weapon Can Push Back B Rank or Below Water Or C Rank or below fire. Due to its Incredible Wind Once Spinning. It can also Cut through A Rank and Below Earth. As This Blade Wind Acts as Very Strong A Rank Wind with VERY Strong Cutting abilities Due to its Sharpness. This Blade Can Also Be Used to throw at an opponent (Kind of like Distrocto disk if you seen Dragon ball Z) And the Weapon Will Come Right back to the User.

    -Note:Everytime Buzz-saw is used That counts as 1/3 turns for the user
    -Note:Can only Use this Weapon to defend Against Attacks 4times (Reduce if you like)
    -Note:Cant Use Ninjutsu While Using Buzz-saw In a turn
    -Note:Cant Use Whatever Element You blocked from in the next Turn
    -Notenly Usable by Teno757

    (Take out anything you see fight or lower the ranks if you must)

    ±± Declined ±± Very similar weapon already exists. A spinning circular disk of cutting wind. Yours just happens to be double blade but the principle is the same.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    -Snake Tail (Hebi No O)
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Hebi No O(Short version:Hebi) was after Dei Dei made is stretchable scarf. He made this sword whip out of the same material just more stronger. Hebi is a 6-part segmented blade; each segment is wider than the one preceding it from the hilt with 2 pick-like protrusions on the front and back of each segment, with the ones on the front much longer than the ones at the back. Hebi's segments grow in number almost without limit. The segments are connected by a stretchable thread that is a very strong material, making Hebi more useful as a whip than an actual sword, though it can serve as a regular sword just as easily, thanks to Dei Dei swordsmanship. Hebi's guard and handle remain the same as a normal katana. While Hebi can be stretched to incredible lengths in its whip form, Dei Dei has a limit of three consecutive attacks before having to bring the segments of Hebi back together for recovery -which makes him fairly vulnerable during this time interval. To make up for this, Dei Dei has to have a plan ahead of time. It is also wrapped in bandages when not in use and the bandages is attached on the hilt which acts on the user will.

    -Mid range is the limit it can reach
    -It can be used three times back to back when it is stretched out. After the third use it has to retract to recover for one turn.
    -Only used by Dei Dei



    (This sword just acts the same as in Bleach but without it going to long range.)

    Dropping this weapon for the one above if it gets approved.

    ±± Declined ±± Seems fine except the bolded part. Either explain it better or remove it. "almost without limit" is too much.

    -Dog Style: Lightning Dog (Inu: Inazuma Inu)
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This mode was created for the user to become similar to a dog. It isn't like Sage Mode or anything like that. It is just sealing and lightning. When the user first goes to Mount Fang they get a seal placed on their stomach that says "Lightning". When the seal is activated it seals away everything expect Lightning chakra. The seal is activated by four hand seals. Lightning shoots out their body forming an aura shaped like a dog(tail, ears, face and paws). The user speed, reaction time increases by +5 each. The user skin starts getting burned from the over amount of lightning. The damage from the burns is +20 per turn. Once the seal is activated it lasts five turnsi but once it ends the user dies from the aura of lightning shocking their body the whole time.
    -Must have signed the Nin Dog or Wolves/Wolf-Dog contract
    -Trained by Dei Dei
    -+5 speed and reaction time each
    -+20 damage per turn
    Last for five turns then the user dies.

    ±± Declined ±± This has many things wrong with it. Its a Raikage's Armor based mode. The fuuin needed for this would be beyond A-Rank which means that you need to have mastered Fuuin, medical included. Also, the +5 part is a reference to the speed chart right? That isn't accepted in the Cj thread.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by bansal View Post
    As the below techniques are D or C Rank technique, and utilizes very less chakra so they can be used any no. of times.

    (Doton: Banbu-copter) - Earth Style: Bamboo-Copter
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 15 [+5 for each extra]
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User focuses on his earth chakra and grows a Bamboo-copter at the top of his head, and coats it with wind chakra. Whose shaft starts spinning very fast, enabling the user to fly. And due to wind chakra its speed is very high. User can also simply create these bamboo-copters in his hands, and than can give it to someone else to fly.
    Note: ~Can only be taught be bansal.


    Declined, this would be of a rank greater than D rank being use with wind chakra and how can earth element grow bamboo , bamboo is a grass and wood so therefore it would require the wood elemental release
    I had a long chat with zen about this on msn. We discussed a lot on this one. So plz let Izanami Kaito check this CJ, only this one.
    Fixed what you said. You can remove the underline part if you think its not right.

    (Doton: Banbu-copter) - Earth Style: Bamboo-Copter
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 20 [+5 for each extra]
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User focuses on his earth chakra and grows a replica Bamboo-copter at the top of his head which is made up of earth, and coats it with wind chakra. Whose shaft starts spinning very fast, enabling the user to fly. And due to wind chakra its speed is very high. User can also simply create these bamboo-copters in his hands, and than can give it to someone else to fly.
    Note: ~Can only be taught be bansal.
    ~banbu-copter lasts until destroyed.
    ~Can be used any no. of time as its a C-rank tech and requires very less chakra.




    ±± Declined ±± Its a Doton/Fuuton not a Doton. Also, how does it attach to you? At what speeds can you travel while flying on it? It would need to last a given amount of time, not to infinity and beyond
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    (Fuuton: Parashu-to) - Wind Style: Parachute
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short/Self
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: While falling from a height, user focuses his wind chakra at his back and creates a wind bag, which opens and forms a big parachute, which enables him to land safely.
    Note: ~If parachute is open, than user will receive +10 Damagae for any fire based technique, he gets attacked with.
    ~Can only be taught by bansal.
    ~Since its a C-rank tech and requires very less chakra so it can be done any no. of time.

    ±± Declined ±± similar technique already exists
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    (Doton: Suke-to) - Earth Style: Skating
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates either skateboard or skates from the earth beneath his feets and coats them in thin layer of wind, which allows the user to stake over many surfaces like any ground, ice, and on any solid surface with ease and with very high speed. User can create ice-skates, roller skates or skateboard according to his requirement. The speed of skates/skateboard is that fast that the user can even skate on water without submerging.
    Note: ~User's speed increases tremendously that only 3T and above can track it.
    ~Skates/Skateboard lasts 3 turns.
    ~Can only be taught by bansal.
    ~Since its a C-rank tech and requires very less chakra, so it can be used any no. of time.
    Skating over water is just like that of "Dash" speed which allows him to be able to run over water without submerging, in movie "The incredibles"

    ±± Declined ±± I'm pretty sure something like this already exists if i'm not mistaken. However, a C-Rank transport that can only be tracked by Sharingan 3T and above? A bit too much. Also, if you intend to use 2 natures, you need to entitle your technique correctly. This is a Doton/Fuuton.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    This is my first CJ or rather CW, that i really wants to get approved, as i worked on it so heartedly.

    Shinigami Reaper | Death God Reaper
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 100
    Description: Once the two Giant Death Gods, one from Heaven, and one from Hell were fightning for a holy sword named "Shinigami Reaper", since it was sword who stated that the winner will be the weilder of it. So even after their 100th fight, the result was the same, Draw. Since none of them was the winner and they do not wanted to give it to their opponent. So they, along with the sword decided to give the sword to someone else. And than they met Enzup, both of them tried to kill him, but couldn't be succeeded. So they liked his true braveness, skills, and mastery in fightning. So they bestowned the sword on Enzup, in hope that he is the one capable of holding it, but the sword was the one who had to chose his master himself, it was upto the sword that it would accept him or not, but the sword was the one who liked Enzup the most and decided to help him conquer anything he wants.
    Since the sword was of those Giant Gods, so its size is also very big. The hilt itself is of 2m height, and the blade is of 3m height making a total lenght of 5m, and its cross guard is of 1m length, while the blade is of half meter. It is a double-edged sword. And have a little curvature in the edge part and pointed on front. It also have a very long chain tied to pommel part. The blade is bloody red in colour which is supposed to be the blood of millions of people killed by it. It also has 2 black strips originating from the rain guard to some extent on blade, and it was supposed to be the curse of people died from it. Its original weight is 1 ton but for user its only 1 kg, superlight weight that allows him to use it more fluently and reaction time of user while using the sword is much more fast than of anyone else using a sword.
    It is considered to have life of its own just like samehada. This sword is indestructible by all means and considerd to be sharpest in the whole world, and even in hell or heaven. Thats the reason, user must wield it very carefully, or else he'll just cut himself off. User can also pass any of his chakra to change the shape of its blade and creates a thick layer coating on sword.

    Abilities:
    -The sword can anytime increase or decrease its weight from 10 ton to 10 Kg.
    -This sword is indestructible and have enormous amount of chakra.
    -It can react on its own when required. Can also sense chakra.
    -It can cut and slice through anything just like butter.
    -When Chakra is passed to the sword, than the hilt remains the same but the blade transforms to |Fire- Phoenix|, |Water-Shark|, |Earth- Dragon|, |Lightning- Snakes|, |Wind- Porcupine|

    Restrictions:
    -As this sword was of those Giant Death Gods, which is very heavy and big in size and have some incredible powers, so it is forbidden to use this weapon.
    -Passing any chakra to the sword, counts as a move, which is equivalent to S-rank offense/Defense/Supplementary.
    -Can channel chakra to the sword only once per turn.
    -Must be kenjutsu mastered, as it requires great skills in that.
    -Can only be used if user is of atleast Kage Rank.
    -The sword can only be wielded by Enzup. If someone else even touches the sword or any part of it, than it will paralyze him completely for one turn.


    ~Declined~ 10 ton is unacceptable, you could easily destroy anything on the field with such a heavy sword. No shape shifting, unless the shapes are pre-determined and well explained. I saw that the shapes were animals, but can the weapon shape at will into anything? Why is the damage 100? Does it damage you opponent just by being in your possession? We don't put damages to CW unless they have a special ability that triggers and attack. Sensing abilities are forbidden from the CJ thread (Or so I heard from Cali). Lastly, the restrictions are almost non-existent for such a weapon, you need to fix that.
    Reduced the weight, No it can't transform into anything, only which are classified and not on its on (added a restriction about it), removed the DP. The Sensing abilities are forbidden, but only for elemental jutsus (i think so), so this rule does not apply on my CW. And if you think it still is forbidden, than plz remove the line "Can also sense chakra." , Btw here is the link where Zen announced the rule. >>CLICK HERE<< Also added restrictions.

    Shinigami Reaper | Death God Reaper
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra COst: 50
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Once the two Giant Death Gods, one from Heaven, and one from Hell were fightning for a holy sword named "Shinigami Reaper", since it was sword who stated that the winner will be the weilder of it. So even after their 100th fight, the result was the same, Draw. Since none of them was the winner and they do not wanted to give it to their opponent. So they, along with the sword decided to give the sword to someone else. And than they met Enzup, both of them tried to kill him, but couldn't be succeeded. So they liked his true braveness, skills, and mastery in fightning. So they bestowned the sword on Enzup, in hope that he is the one capable of holding it, but the sword was the one who had to chose his master himself, it was upto the sword that it would accept him or not, but the sword was the one who liked Enzup the most and decided to help him conquer anything he wants.
    Since the sword was of those Giant Gods, so its size is also very big. The hilt itself is of 2m height, and the blade is of 3m height making a total lenght of 5m, and its cross guard is of 1m length, while the blade is of half meter. It is a double-edged sword. And have a little curvature in the edge part and pointed on front. It also have a very long chain tied to pommel part. The blade is bloody red in colour which is supposed to be the blood of millions of people killed by it. It also has 2 black strips originating from the rain guard to some extent on blade, and it was supposed to be the curse of people died from it. Its original weight is 1 ton but only for user its 1 kg, superlight weight that allows him to use it more fluently and reaction time of user while using the sword is much more than of anyone else using a sword.
    It is considered to have life of its own just like samehada. This sword is indestructible by all means and considerd to be sharpest in the whole world, and even in hell or heaven. Thats the reason, user must wield it very carefully, or else he'll just cut himself off. User can also pass any of his chakra to transform the blade and creates a thick layer of coating on sword.

    Abilities:
    -The sword can anytime increase or decrease its weight from 1 ton to 1 Kg.
    -This sword is indestructible and have enormous amount of chakra.
    -It can react on its own when required. Can also sense chakra.
    -It can cut and slice through anything just like butter.
    -When Chakra is passed to the sword, than the hilt remains the same but the blade transforms to |Fire- Phoenix|, |Water-Shark|, |Earth- Dragon|, |Lightning- Snakes|, |Wind- Porcupine|

    Restrictions:
    -Passing any chakra to the sword, counts as a move, which is equivalent to S-rank Offense/Defense/Supplementary.
    -Can channel chakra to the sword only once per turn.
    -The sword can only transform in the animals listed above, and only when user passes chakra to it, not on its own.
    -If user gets hit by a jutsu while holding this sword, than he will receive an addition of +10 damage points.
    -The sword can only be wielded by Enzup. If someone else even touches the sword or any part of it, than it will paralyze him completely for one turn.


    ±± Declined ±± Sensing weapons are banned from submission. Only sensing weapons to be accepted are the NB's 7SM. Also, why is this weapon forbidden? Too many abilities stacked into it. Its basically a mash up of several existing concepts, but cannon and custom. I'll give you one more try before DNR.

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    (Fuuton: Dojou Kiri) - Wind Style: Soil Mist
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user puts his hands on earth and then quickly passes sharp wind chakra in it to convert earth into fluffy soil/fine dust particles of anywhere in battlefield. This technique can be used to turn the earth techs of the opponent into fluufly soil. The fluffy soil (when beneath the target) can be used as soil mist, by passing wind chakra quickly into it and forcing the soil to go upto 3m height instantly and thus dust particles goes into the opponent's eyes and also blocks the vision of him, as the dust particles are all around him.
    Note: ~The soil mist automatically settles after 1 turns~
    ~As the opponent eyes are filled with dust particles, he can't see and perform the jutsu properly for one turn (more time will be required to perform any jutsu)~
    ~The earth technique(which has to be converted in soil) should be in contact with the earth(base, on which user puts his hand) to be converted into soil~
    ~This is the advanced form of - "(Fuuton: Ubuge Tochi) - Wind Style: Fluffy Soil".
    ~Can only be used 3 times per battle~
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup~

    ~Declined~ You never take control of your opponent's jutsu, take out the part where you turn it to soil. Why wouldn't your opponent be able to perform chakra if he can't see clearly? Either take that part out or explain it better. Take out the part where you say it's an advanced form of the submission above; it was declined. I only consider approving this one because the whole jutsu doesn't revolve around converting earth to sand/soil/dust.
    (Fuuton: Dojou Kiri) - Wind Style: Soil Mist
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user slams his hands on earth and then quickly passes his sharp wind chakra in it to convert the earth into fluffy soil of anywhere in battlefield. The fluffy soil (when beneath the target) can be used as soil mist, by passing wind chakra quickly into it and forcing the soil to go upto 3m height instantly and thus dust particles goes into the opponent's eyes and also blocks the vision of him, as the dust particles are all around him.
    Note: ~The soil mist automatically settles after 1 turns~
    ~This technique can also be used to convert any earth technique into fluffy soil, if that earth technique is in contact with the ground on which user has slammed his hands.
    ~Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ±± Declined ±± Look at the red part. Unacceptable. You can't transform your opponents jutsu into fluffy earth. Thats manipulating the enemys jutsu which is forbidden. Also, your description is a mess. Please work on it a bit.

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    (Hulk Mo-Do) - Hulk Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User passes his chakra to each cell of his body and expands the size of cells and thus user's body also gets expanded by almost double size. So that he looks like a monstor and his power and physical strength becomes 10 times then a normal shinobi. And after that he passes doton chakra to make his body even harder than diamond and because of physical strength and hardness he does not have any effect of earth techniques.
    While in this mode he can take instant jumps upto 30m height and moves to any range and when landing from sky, he can destroy everything on earth's surface by punching it, within its range. His speed increases tremendously which is comparable to the raikage's speed while lightning armour activated. In this mode user can't use any of the basic 5 elements except earth and lightning (hardness and speed). He gives double damage points to any taijustu move and 50% more to other moves, and receives 50% less damage to any jutsu and does not have any effect of jutsus upto C-Rank due to the toughness, power, physical strength and hardness.
    Note: ~Can only be used once per battle and lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Biggest demerit of this mode is that after entering in this mode, user can't use basic 5 elements except earth and lightning.
    ~After this mode is over each and every cell of user's body starts paining him very hard for next 2 turns.
    ~User gets exhausted and fatigue due to which his speed decreases by 2 levels.
    ~User can't use any jutsu above B-Rank for next 2 turns.
    ~User gives 20 less damage points and receives 20 more damage points and requires 20 more chakra points, for any jutsu.
    Just try imagining him in skin color, instead of green color.


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Just no.
    I changed it almost completely.

    (Hulk Mo-Do) - Hulk Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User passes his chakra to each cell of his body and expands the size of cells and thus user's body also gets expanded by almost double size. So that he looks like a monstor and his power and physical strength increases tremendously. And after that he passes strong doton chakra to make his body even harder than diamond and because of physical strength and hardness his body itself becomes like an armour.
    When this mode is used, expansion of the cells recovers any damage which user has received during the battle. And grants him tremendous power but only for short period of time.
    While in this mode he can take jumps upto 10m height. And when landing from sky, he can destroy everything on earth's surface by punching it, within its range. His speed also increases which is comparable to the naruto in sage mode. In this mode user can't use any of the basic 5 elements except earth and lightning (hardness and speed). He gives +40 to any taijustu move and +20 more to earth and lightning and receives less damage to any jutsu and does not have any effect of earth and lightning jutsus. Although the power which is granted to the user are extremely good, but after this mode is over, the user comes to his normal form and dies due to extreme amount of chakra and cell size increased.
    Note: ~Can only be used once per battle and lasts for 5 turns.
    ~Every jump of the user counts as 1/3 move and from every jump the user can change his range from short to mid, mid to long or vice versa.
    ~Biggest demerit of this mode is that after entering in this mode, user can't use basic 5 elements except earth and lightning.
    ~User dies after the mode is over.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ±± Declined, Do not Resubmitt ±± If you ever try and do something like this again, you will be banned from the CJ thread. Another mod said "Do not resubmit". That means never and forever. Consider this your one and only warning.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Mathias View Post
    (Sogeki Geijutsu: Ransōtengai) - Sniper Arts: Heavenly Suit
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 chakra per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Ransōtengai was created by Sellanes, he was Mathias' grand-father. Sellanes was the first and only bow master of his time. During the first great ninja war, Sellanes created the technique so that he could continue fighting and shooting arrows while having dislocated and immobilized limbs. This technique has been passed down from generation to generation between sniper prodigies. The technique involves pushing shape manipulation to its absolute limits. The user will gather up and release pure chakra outwards, coating his immobilized limbs and dislocated joints with a web-like effect, to forcefully move them. However, it does come with some drawbacks. The user will only be able to use Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, Sniper Arts, and Regular Ninjutsu while this technique is active. This technique does not enhance speed nor strength.

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Must have knowledge over Sniper Arts
    Note: The technique lasts for three turns
    Note: No Sniper Arts for two turns after the technique ends.
    Note: After the technique is over, the user will no longer have any control over those limbs for the rest of the battle
    Note: Due to forcefully pushing the bodies' limbs/joints to their limits, the user will receive -5 damage per turn.
    Note: Can only be used by Mathias.




    ~Declined~ I have no trouble with the actual technique (though I have my doubts on whether or not it was already done), but the restrictions are off. -5 doesn't mean anything in a fight, and such a technique should come with some form of drawback other than no sniper arts for 2 turns. Let's face it, all the other restrictions don't affect you since you couldn't move your limbs to begin with before using this technique.
    Resubmitting:

    (Sogeki Geijutsu: Ransōtengai) - Sniper Arts: Cloak of the Heavens
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 50 (-10 chakra per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A (-40 to user)
    Description: Ransōtengai was created by Sellanes, he was Mathias' grand-father. Sellanes was the first and only bow master of his time. During the first great ninja war, Sellanes created the technique so that he could continue fighting and shooting arrows while having dislocated and immobilized limbs. This technique has been passed down from generation to generation between sniper prodigies. The technique involves pushing shape manipulation to its absolute limits. The user will gather up and release 50% of his chakra reserves. As the chakra is pouring out of his body, it will manifest a very bright blue angelic web-like cloak that coats the immobilized limbs and dislocated joints to forcefully move them. However, it does come with some drawbacks. The user will only be able to use Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, Sniper Arts, and Regular Ninjutsu while this technique is active. This technique does not enhance speed nor strength.

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Must have knowledge over Sniper Arts
    Note: The technique lasts for three turns
    Note: No Sniper Arts for two turns after the technique ends.
    Note: Due to forcefully pushing the bodies' limbs/joints to their limits and releasing so much chakra, the user will receive -40 damage at the start of the activation.
    Note: No ninjutsu of any kind including elemental ninjutsus for one turn after this technique ends.
    Note: 50% of the user's chakra is drained.
    Note: The user wont be able to run or walk for two turns due to exhaustion and chakra loss.
    Note: Can only be used by Mathias.

    I'd like to apologize for the first time I submitted this technique, as you mentioned it had no real drawbacks. And I also made it forbidden due to all the drawbacks, but you could change it back to S rank if you'd like. It really does not matter as I'm not gaining any damage or anything.

    ±± Declined ±± I still think the restrictions are a bit off. You don't need to make it forbidden however you do need to make it logical: if you can't run or walk what is the point and how can you use taijutsu or kenjutsu without actually walking? Think about what you actually want from this technique.

    New:

    (Ame Sutairu: Genwaku Ame) - Rain Style: Blinding Rain
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid - Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Being very similar in relation to "(Secchakuzai no Kouu) - Rain of Glue". After performing the Dog hand seal, the user changes the compounds of the water(materials in the air), so that the rain droplets around the opponent, start shining so bright, it blinds him for a few seconds, the target will have blurry vision for that turn. If this technique is used short range of the user, he will also be blinded.

    Note: Must have mastered Rain
    Note: Must wait one turn before re-using
    Note: Due to being a blinding technique, it can only be used three times per battle.
    Note: Must be taught by Mathias

    Edit: ±± Declined ±± Similar techniques exist. Mainly the blinding mist for example. Lets not forget that rain and water are very closely tied together in our RP, thus a blinding rain and a blinding mist are too much alike.

    (Suiton: Ketatamashii Toraidento) - Water Style: Piercing Trident
    Rank: B
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: Using the moister in the air, the user will materialize a small trident the size of a pencil. The water trident will then pierce a desired object within short range of the user. Once inside the wound, the water will spread outwards leaving a stinging sensation around the injured area for one turn.

    Note: Must have complete mastery over water
    Note: Can be used three times per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Mathias

    ±± Declined ±± Similar to existing technique

    Feel free to edit anything to help its approval ^_^
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-07-2012 at 10:07 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Soul Reapers collection (Shinigami no kaishuu)
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Soul reapers collection is set of swords, spears and axes, the primary weapon is a sword named Mephistopheles which retains the weapons most abilities. The set is a Caelum family treasure and thus can only be used by the current head of the family (being Leaf), anyone else to wield it is instantly electrocuted. To indicate the swords abilities are in effect, the sword turns the user’s eyes to red from blue. To ensure the users ease, he only needs to keep the Mephistopheles with him at all times, other weapons can be summoned at any time in the battle with a single swing of the sword which materializes a weapon from thin air and can then be launched via telekinesis (though the ability is limited to launching to only weapons that are part of the set).
    Contents:
    Mephistopheles: Weapon appears to be a falchion fashioned with an engine at the hilt, this is the primary weapon. Its abilities include: Being infused with lightning release(effectively allowing it to cut through tough surfaces unless the surface is hardened with chakra) and thus being able to cancel out other jutsu of Earth and lightning nature (Up to B rank) and other technique (Up to C rank). Summoning other weapons of the set and controlling them via telekinesis.
    Other weapons: includes Single handed and both handed swords both double edged and single edged, Spear and javelins and battle axes. Up to 6 weapons can be used at a time (including Mephistopheles) and each weapon can attracts a unique value of voltage which user decides while summoning them (it cannot however attract an opponent’s jutsu as it is literally impossible to calculate the lightning technique’s volts in midst of battle)
    Note: Can only be used by Leaf.
    Note: Only the sets weapons can be used with telekinesis and requires Mephistopheles to be in users hands.
    Note: Weapons don’t attract opponents lightning jutsu.
    Note: Other restrictions are stated in the description to keep it clean.

    ±± Declined ±± The lightning ability is a copy of many existing weapons. Also, don't you already have a CW? If so, you need to link it stating you drop it as you submit a new one. Btw, nice interesting weapon ^^
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Name: (Doton:Ie Ichi Dearou Raikou)Earth Release:None May Enter
    Rank:C
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Long
    Damage:N/A
    Chakra:20
    Description:The user preforms a short sequence of hand seals [Snake-Ram-Rat] and slams their hand to the ground,injecting their chakra into the battlefield.The users chakra pulls all the particles of dust,mud and earth together tightening them and making them completely impenetrable by means of chakra.Due to the users chakra in the ground no one,not even the user himself can go underground using chakra.Should someone attempt to hide underground a spike will be erected from the ground at the spot the chakra was concentrated at.
    Notence activated it lasts for 3 turns.
    Note:Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    Note:Any type of chakra to come in direct contact with the ground will trigger a pillar to burst out.
    Note:Must be taught by -Cobalt-.

    ±± Declined ±± This is by no means a C-Rank. Also, many similar techniques exist (that prevent your enemy from going under using your earth chakra and spike-related ones, even cannon).

    Name: (Houmen Za Kinpaku)Release The Tension
    Rank:B
    Range:Short
    Chakra:25
    Type:Supplementary
    Description:At the start of a battle the user calms his mind to make the chakra in his system flow faster through his body to release the tension from the users body.This allows the user to become faster and stronger due to the faster flow of chakra in his body.The user gains better reflexes and can also react faster to attacks.
    Note:Can only be taught by SilverMoon1996
    Note:Must be activated at the start of the battle.
    Note::Lasts for 8 turns when activated.
    This is the basic one I would like to upgrade it now.

    Name: (Kyousei Houmen Za Kinpaku)Greater Release The Tension
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Type:Supplementary
    Chakra:30
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The "Greater Release The Tension" is a more advanced ninjutsu technique then it's parent jutsu "Release The Tension".The GRTT is a stronger version of RTT.The process of releasing the tension from ones body and mind is the same only the effect is much stronger.The user enters a more complex and deeper state of mind which gives him complete clarity of thought giving them much greater reflexes.The physical capabilities of the user are greatly increased thus he is much faster and stronger.The users overall speed is higher and the user can preform hand seals at a much faster rate.
    Note:Must be taught by -Cobalt-.
    Note:Must have activated "Release The Tension" beforehand.This technique can be activated at any point of the battle only if RTT was activated at the beginning of the battle.
    Note:May only be used once per battle.
    Note:Lasts for 6 turns.

    ±± Declined ±± You need to explain the bonus better and still such bonus are a bit too much. You become stronger and faster but without stating a comparison whats to stop you from saying you become as fast as a 3rd gate user? Please clarify ^^

    Name: (Mokuton:Hitoshirenu Okeru Mokuzai No Jutsu)Wood Release:Hidden in Wood Technique
    Rank:C
    Range:Short-Long
    Type:Supplementary/Defense
    Chakra:20
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user channels Wood chakra throughout his whole body and then merges together with another tree.This allows the user to freely move in a tree covered location.Along with being able to merge with the trees the user gains the ability to move from one tree to another but only if they are in short range of each other.This technique is similar to Earth Release:Hidden in Rocks Technique.
    Note:Must be taught by -Cobalt-.
    Note:Must have a Wood bio.
    Note:While merged with a tree the user cannot use any other techniques but Wood Release.

    ±± Declined ±± look at bolded. Make it up to C-Rank wood
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kage no Reggusuīpu) Shadow Leg Sweep
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary/Offense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: Using Flash bombs to extend your shadow and instead of form it into a giant hand that crushes the opponent, it was formed in a giant leg which sweep across the battlefield 60 degree.
    Notes:
    - Only be used by Nara members
    - No A-rank shadow tech for next turn

    ±± Declined ±± restrictions? And define Giant.

    Quote Originally Posted by Nara.. View Post
    (Suiton: Mizu Iwa) Water Release: Water Rock
    Type: Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user make some hand seals and then make a palm on the ground which release multiple Water Rock from the water around him up to mid-range. These rocks are of medium size and each can block up to B-rank attacks. The user after making, send more chakra making the water hardened like a rock, making it denser to be simple. The user can also use this to make a single larger rock but it is limited to short-range and when done a single, it can protect up to A-rank. Due to that it is created many rocks at once, the user exhaust from it but can block multiple attacks.
    Notes
    - Can only be used twice in a battle
    - The user cannot use A-rank and higher water tech for next 2 turns
    I don't know why, when I edit again the description turn only into one sentence O.o and it is not a projectile, it create a rock-shaped water to protect the user


    ~Declined~ You completely ignored what I said in your last submission.

    (Suiton: Kage Mizu Bakudan) Water Release: Shadow Water Bomb
    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:User creates a large ball of water in which his shadow chakra are molded. When the ball is released, and it is launched towards the enemy, the enemy takes some damage but if launched towards the shadow, the ball can summon the shadow chakra and control the target.
    - The shadow possession occur if succeed
    - No A rank or higher water and shadow tech in next 2 turns
    - Can only be used thrice in battle.

    ~Declined~ When re-submitting/editing jutsus, you need to put the added/altered part in bold. If you only took out part of your jutsu, you need to mention what was taken away.
    (Suiton: Mizu Iwa) Water Release: Water Rock
    Type: Defense/ Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user make some hand seals and then make a palm on the ground which release 8 Water Rock which cover around him, These rocks are of medium size and each can block up to B-rank attacks. The user after making, send more chakra making the water hardened like a rock, making it denser to be simple.The user can cancel the water rock and use it to launch another water projectile
    Notes
    - Can only be used twice in a battle
    - The user cannot use A-rank and higher water tech for next 2 turns
    I basically rework the description


    ±± Declined ±± 8 "rocks" that can protect each from up to B-Rank? Too much. That means that combined they can block up to 8xB-Rank which is 2 S-Ranks. Too much indeed. Also the concept of Water rocks? You are mixing things a bit.

    (Suiton: Kage Mizu Bakudan) Water Release: Shadow Water Bomb
    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:User creates a large ball of water in which his shadow chakra are molded. When the ball is released, and it is launched towards the enemy, the enemy takes some damage but if launched towards the shadow, the ball can summon the shadow chakra and control the target.
    - The shadow possession occur if succeed
    - No A rank or higher water and shadow tech in next 2 turns
    - Can only be used thrice in battle.

    *I remove the launch multiple part*


    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. The shadow within the water ball would disperse without something to actually produce shadow as it travels around the field. Also, the concept is pretty off and you've already had chances to make it approvable.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Daburu Hamono)-Double Edged
    Rank:A
    Type:Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user begins by taking on the Hasso-gamae stance, holding their sheathed blade in their hands. When the enemy comes to attack with Kenjutsu, the user will utilize the Hasso stances' ability to react from eight sides, to efficiently block the incoming slash. The user will then proceed to unsheathe the sword, using the opening to step in with their leading foot, and slash the enemy twice, before once again resuming the Hasso Kendo stance. Whether they re-sheathe their blade again is up to them.
    ~Can only be used by a Samurai
    ~Can only be used three times per battle.

    ±± Leaving for Izanami ±± Not the kenjutsu specialist.

    (Suiton/Fuuton:Arutearisu)-Water/Wind Release:Altairis
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user begins by bringing their arms above their head and focusing their Suiton chakra into a concentrated sphere of water which takes form above the palms. The sphere is around the same size as a softball and gradually grows in size. Afterwards, the user will infuse their Fuuton chakra into the dense sphere of water, using almost the same principles as Typhoon Vortex. Upon finishing, the user brings their arms back down, and sends the ball of water in the intended direction. Upon impact, the ball will release an incredible amount of concussive force enough to do cause fatal damage to any people, as well as destroy anything within seven meters of the point of "detonation." The extreme concussive force is aided by the Fuuton chakra infused into the technique.
    ~Can only be used thrice per battle
    ~Cannot be used two turns consecutively

    ±± Pending ±± I need to talk to zen about this one.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Gingka Uzumaki View Post
    Pegasus Blade

    Type: Attack Weapon (Sword)

    Rank: S

    Chakra Cost: N/A (40 when flowing Katon through it)

    Damage Points: 60 (80 with Katon)

    Description: Pegasus Blade: A Blade made of Steel. This blade has been passed down from users of the legendary Pegasus beyblade. This blade is mainly made of Steel, but this Steel is imbued with Fire Chakra, so you can combine Katon with this blade with Quickness and Strength unseen before. The hilt is made of Pegasus feathers and more Steel covered with the feathers.

    Pictures: Pegasus Blade:


    ~Pending~ How will the bold part affect your techniques and your abilities?
    It will make the power of Blade stronger than most Katon-Infused swords, and even swords of it's form and size. Also, the Katon will power the speed, and make it more swift.
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Serpent View Post
    (Kinjutsu Katon: Hinote Doki) Forbidden Fire Art: Infernal Wrath
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage points: 90 (-30 to user)
    Description: The user makes one hand seal holding it as he charges his Katon Chakra, A symbolic ring of flame will form around a mid range area with the user in the center. The user will then rise his hands in the air releasing the Chakra in an all out blaze. anyone within the ring will be burned as columns of Flame rise from underneath them. Because of the intense heat the user will be chard causing damage upon himself.
    Notes:
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Must have Mastered Fire Element.
    -No S-ranked or above Fire Next 2 turns.
    -Must Charge for 10 seconds.
    -User takes 30 damage.
    -Can only be taught by Serpent.

    ~Declined~ I'm ready to accept this one, even though a somewhat similar technique already exist, but you'll need to work the restrictions. -30 damages means nothing to me, and you should know that it doesn't affect you in a battle whatsoever. I want real physical damages from using this technique (unable to move, dizziness, burnt limb making them useless...etc).

    (Ken-Doujutsu: Abunai Kizu) Saber Eye Art: Critical Slash
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: Using their Sharingan, the user will pinpoint the most critical attack point on the opponent slashing them with their blade which is charged with chakra, once the opponent is sliced the Chakra will be released acting as an "Intruder". This causes the opponents Chakra to concentrate on the point of attack, making it so the opponent is unable to gather enough chakra for powerful attacks of S-rank or higher.
    Note:
    -Requires an Uchiha bio with 3t Sharingan.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Last 2 turns.
    -Can only be taught by Serpent.

    ~Declined~ Your chakra isn't white blood cells , I see no reason why your opponent's chakra would be dragged toward the wound. Unless there's some form of fuinjutsu placed when you slash your opponent, this technique won't work.

    (Kin-Kenjutsu: Klen Doki) Forbidden Saber Art: Slicing Wrath
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage points: 90 (-30 to user)
    Description: The user dashes at the opponent as he charges chakra into his blade. he will then unleash a fury of overwhelming strikes and slashes at the opponent that appear as a blur that only Doujutsu can track, dicing the opponent. Because of focused amount of chakra in the blade, this attack is able to cut through Steal and even the Bone of an Kaguya. however, because of the speed and strain on the user, he will be left feeling drained.
    Note:
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Must have Mastered Kenjutsu.
    -No S-ranked or above Next turn.
    -No Kenjutsu next 3 turns
    -User takes 30 damage.
    -Can only be taught by Serpent.

    ~Declined~ Why is this even forbidden-rank? Also, I'll be leaving this technique to mugi once you resubmit, he's the Kaguya expert here
    (Kinjutsu Katon: Hinote Doki) Forbidden Fire Art: Infernal Wrath
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage points: 90 (-30 to user)
    Description: The user makes one hand seal holding it as he charges his Katon Chakra, A symbolic ring of flame will form around a mid range area with the user in the center. The user will then rise his hands in the air releasing the Chakra in an all out blaze. anyone within the ring will be burned as columns of Flame rise from underneath them. Because of the intense heat the user will be chard causing damage upon himself. Because of the output of chakra, the user will feel drained, leaving them in a dizzy state.
    Notes:
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Must have Mastered Fire Element.
    -No S-ranked or above Fire Next 2 turns.
    -Must Charge for 10 seconds.
    -User takes 30 damage.
    -Dizziness last 2 turns
    -Can only be taught by Serpent.

    ±± Declined ±± Almost there. If you are burned from the fire/heat of the technique you should also experience some kind of penalty in terms of speed and movement.


    (Ken-Doujutsu: Abunai Kizu) Saber Eye Art: Critical Slash
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: Using their Sharingan, the user will pinpoint the most critical attack point on the opponent slashing them with their blade which is charged with chakra, once the opponent is sliced the Chakra will be released blasting the opponent back to Mid range
    Note:
    -Requires an Uchiha bio with 3t Sharingan.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Serpent.

    ±± Approved ±±


    (Kin-Kenjutsu: Klen Doki) Forbidden Saber Art: Slicing Wrath
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user dashes at the opponent as he charges chakra into his blade. he will then unleash a fury of overwhelming strikes and slashes at the opponent that appear as a blur that only Doujutsu can track, dicing the opponent. Because of focused amount of chakra in the blade, this attack is able to cut through Steal and even the Bone of an Kaguya. however, because of the speed and strain on the user, he will be left feeling drained.
    Note:
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Must have Mastered Kenjutsu.
    -No S-ranked or above Next turn.
    -No Kenjutsu next 3 turns
    -Can only be taught by Serpent.

    ±± Leaving for Mugi ±±
    ~Declined~ Kimimaro vs the Samurais proved that chakra enhanced swords cannot cut through the bones, similar technique exists and its OP

    I made it Forbidden because of the Speed and ability to slice through Kaygua Bone, but If it doesn't need to be Forbidden I am Content with it being a lower Rank.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Light~ View Post

    ‡Sode No Shirayuki - Sleeved White Snow‡

    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A [+30 When using the Ice spikes]
    Damage Points: N/A [+10 To Ice release techniques]
    Description: Sode no Shirayoki or literally meaning Snow-white sleeves, Sode no Shirayuki is a long white Katana with a long white rippon that's attached to the back of it's handle, This is a special Katana forged in the the Yuki clan only to be used by Ice release users who were mostly associated with Ice release techniques, the Katana is made out of a special metal that utilizes the Ice release chakra, whenever the user injects Ice release chakra into the Katana, the Katana releases cold air around it that looks like a faint white transparent aura, allowing the user's Ice release techniques to gain more power, and helps the user perform Ice release techniques with one less handseal than it's normally used to perform Ice techniques and is performed faster than normal whenever the user is wielding the Katana in one of her hands, the second special ability is that the Katana uses the Ice as means to attack, to activated the second ability of the Katana the user concentrates +30 chakra to Sode no Shirayuki and points the tip of the Katana towards her target, releasing an enormous sized wave of Ice that's at the size of the Gold dust wave technique but with Ice instead of Gold dust this wave hits the opponent crushing them due to the pressure of the wave of Ice, the wave of Ice is equal to an A-ranked Ice release technique and is a long ranged technique.
    Note: The wave of Ice can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: The wave of Ice counts as one of the user's moves allowed per turn.
    Note: The wave of Ice can only be used once every two turns.
    Note: This Katana is indestructible however that doesn't mean it can cut through everything.[*]Sode no Shirayuki can only be used by an Ice release user bio.


    ~Declined~ I'm done accepting swords that are just copy cats. +10 to an element and 1 less hand seals? There's at least 50 swords that do the exact same thing. I mean why bother submitting a custom for such a sword, let's give one to everyone and it'll be settled lol.

    (Hyōton: Kōri Dōbutsu Sōshi) - Ice Release: Ice Animals Creation
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 [+10 to manipulate the animals movements]
    Damage Points: N/A [60 if used as an attack or defense]
    Description: This technique is an advanced Hyōton technique that's used like Sai's ink ninjutsu techniques but with the usage of the Hyōton chakra, by changing the moist in the air or adding Hyōton chakra to form transparent animals made out of the structures of the Ice release, the user can form the shape of various animals of Ice and have them to perform tasks like animals that crawl and wrap around the opponent binding them, flying animals that can be used to fly on top of it, large structured animals that can be used to defend from incoming attacks, or powerful animals that can cause blunt damage to the opponent. these animals are transparent and the user can see through them but not a clear vision, due to the Ice's structure the user's vision is distored when he's looking through them, the user is able to manipulate the animals movements through the usage of his chakra but he can't manipulate and change their shape once he finished forming them.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: No Ice release techniques higher than A-rank for the next turn.

    ~Declined~ How many of those can you create with this technique? How long do they stay on the field?
    ‡Sode No Shirayuki - Sleeved White Snow‡
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A [+30 When using each special ability]
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Sode no Shirayoki or literally meaning Snow-white sleeves, Sode no Shirayuki is a long white Katana with a long white rippon that's attached to the back of it's handle, This is a special Katana forged in the the Yuki clan only to be used by Ice release users who were mostly associated with Ice release techniques, the Katana is made out of a special metal that utilizes the Ice release chakra, whenever the user injects Ice release chakra into the Katana, the Katana releases cold air around it that looks like a faint white transparent aura which is considered the sword's first special ability, The first ability is freezing ability which the sword has utilizing the cold breeze that's released out of the sword when the user injects the blade with Ice release chakra, making anything that the sword comes in contact with turns into Ice as the freezing aura of the blade freezes the cells and atoms that it touches, but only fully destroys B-rank and lower techniques, it only decreases the heat of the higher ranked techniques than B-rank and weakens them, but for the freezing aura to take effect the sword must have a physical contact with the target excluding B-ranked fire techniques, as the freezing aura decreases the temperature of the air drastically causing the fire to be put out by the cold air when it's at short range from the user. whenever the user is wielding the Katana in one of her hands, the second special ability is that the Katana uses the Ice as means to attack, to activated the second ability of the Katana the user concentrates +30 chakra to Sode no Shirayuki and points the tip of the Katana towards her target, releasing an enormous sized wave of Ice that's at the size of the Gold dust wave technique but with Ice instead of Gold dust this wave hits the opponent crushing them due to the pressure of the wave of Ice, the wave of Ice is equal to an A-ranked Ice release technique and is a long ranged technique, The Katana also allows the user to perform techniques only restricted to the Katana's style, which are called "dances" (custom techniques in which will be submitted later)
    Note: The freezing ability of the sword counts as an A-ranked Ice release technique technique.
    Note: The freezing ability can only be used three times per battle.
    Note: The wave of Ice can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: The wave of Ice can only be used once every two turns.
    Note: The two special abilities of the Katana counts as a move for each.
    Note: This Katana is indestructible however that doesn't mean it can cut through everything.
    Note: Sode no Shirayuki can only be used by an Ice release user bio.

    -Shape of the Katana-


    ±± Declined ±± The ability to freeze the cells and atoms? just by touching it? Too much. The way its worded and the lack of limit makes it so that you can state it can freeze a person completely by simply one touch, making it one hit knock out which is not acceptable. Also, simply the description. Its too long. No need to make it that big unless there is some content to it. Also, a sword that shoots a wave of ice? why is it different than a sword that shoots a wave of lava?

    (Hyōton: Kōri Dōbutsu Sōshi) - Ice Release: Ice Animals Creation
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 [+10 to manipulate the animals movements]
    Damage Points: N/A [60 if used as an attack or defense]
    Description: This technique is an advanced Hyōton technique that's used like Sai's ink ninjutsu techniques but with the usage of the Hyōton chakra, by changing the moist in the air or adding Hyōton chakra to form transparent animals made out of the structures of the Ice release, the user can form the shape of various animals of Ice and have them to perform tasks like animals that crawl and wrap around the opponent binding them, flying animals that can be used to fly on top of it, large structured animals that can be used to defend from incoming attacks, or powerful animals that can cause blunt damage to the opponent. these animals are transparent and the user can see through them but not a clear vision, due to the Ice's structure the user's vision is distored when he's looking through them, the user is able to manipulate the animals movements through the usage of his chakra but he can't manipulate and change their shape once he finished forming them.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: Only a fixed number of 4 animals can be formed at a time if the animals created are earth based animals "doesn't have wings"
    Note: The user can only form 2 flying animals of Ice, each animal can hold one person on his head.
    Note: The Ice animals last for 2 turns.

    Note: No Ice release techniques higher than A-rank for the next turn.

    ±± Declined ±± how big can these animals be? at what distance from the user can they be created?


    [Hyōton Some no mai: Tsukishiro] - Ice Release First Dance: White Moon
    Type: Offensive/ Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: This is one of the dances of Sode no Shirayuki, to use this technique Rukia releases a large amount of Hyoton chakra into Sode no Shirayuki as she proceeds to call out the name of the first dance, while holding her Katana out in front of her and turns it in a circle counter clockwise While she is turning it, the blade, hilt and tsuba turn completely white. The tsuba becomes a hollow snowflake-like circle with the white ribbon extending from the pommel, after turning the blade as it's upside down infront of Rukia, the blade of Sode no Shirayuki glows with a white aura surrounding it as Rukia performs a slashing motion when her target is in position, a large ice circle forms around her intended target which freezes everything that touches it. The circle not only freezes the ground but everything within the circle's influence including anything above it up in the air, creating an extending pillar of light that then freezes all within in the circle, though it can be countered with an A-ranked fire technique or higher.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: Must be in possession of Sode no Shirayuki.



    ±± Declined ±± Restrictions? And btw, this technique would need some kind of delay from the point were chakra pools beneath he enemy and the point were the freezing occurs. Also, short to long is too much.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Kadata sutoringusu) Kadata Strings
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: short-long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: This technique takes basic puppet strings and basic element infusion and puts them together. The user (without handseals) puts twice the amount of chakra needed to make normal chakra strings and infuse them with elemental chakra to make them stronger. These strings can be used to attach themselves to puppets and other objects under the user's control that are capable of moving of their own accord (weapons/like chiyo did with the kunai). The object/puppet gains that elemental affinity of the chakra string they are attached with. Each element gives the strings different abilities. The srings can be manipulated however the user sees fit.

    Water: gives them erosive property (not acid, more like water erosion)

    Wind: gives them more cutting property

    Lightning: gives them a paralyzing affect (1 turn if touched) and cutting (if stabbed)

    Fire: gives them a burning property

    Earth: makes them stronger (harder to break)

    -Elements include basic 5/CE
    -Can only use 1 element at a time (both hands)
    -Can only use 5 times per battle (once per element).
    -Can only be used by Puppet Users.
    -Stays in effect for two 1 turn
    -Must wait 2 turns after use to use again (3 turns total)
    -No S-rank puppet techniques in the same turn
    -Strings become visible when in use
    -User is drained -15 chakra each time used
    -User can be caught/affected by the technique (if applicable)
    -User suffers -3 damage to fingertips (if applicable...fire/lightning)

    -Lighting paralyzing last two 1 turn.
    -Can be used on existing strings
    - Can Can't control puppets while in effect (with the used hand)
    - Can only be taught be Black Uchiha

    ~Leaving for Roku~
    Edit:

    It seems I may have misinterperated Rokus last message so I will revaluate this technique.

    Declined. Even though you took its duration from 2 turns to 1, you still have 5 uses of the technique. A technique of this rank typically gets 1-3 uses even with a waiting period between each use.
    Fixed with your notes above and your notes in our convo (convo link)

    (Kadata sutoringusu) Kadata Strings
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: short-long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: This technique takes basic puppet strings and basic element infusion and puts them together. The user (without handseals) puts twice the amount of chakra needed to make normal chakra strings and infuse them with elemental chakra to make them stronger. These strings can be used to attach themselves to puppet/objects under the user's control that are capable of moving of their own accord (weapons/like chiyo did with the kunai). The object becomes infused with that elemental affinity of the chakra string they are attached with, and can preform according to the element (Lightning/wind incresses cutting power...etc)....the strings connected to the puppet transfers the element to the weapons housed inside the puppet. Each element gives the strings different abilities. The srings can be manipulated however the user sees fit.

    Water: gives them erosive property (not acid, more like water erosion)

    Wind: gives them more cutting property

    Lightning: gives them a paralyzing affect (1 turn if touched) and cutting (if stabbed)

    Fire: gives them a burning property

    Earth: makes them stronger (harder to break)

    -Elements include basic 5/CE
    -Can only use 1 element at a time (both hands)
    -Can only use 3 times per battle
    -Can only be used by Puppet Users.
    -Stays in effect for 1 turn
    -Must wait 2 turns after use to use again (3 turns total)
    -No S-rank puppet techniques in the same turn
    -Strings become visible when in use
    -User is drained -15 chakra each time used (on top of the chakra cost)
    -User can be caught/affected by the technique (if applicable)
    -Lighting paralyzing last 1 turn.
    -Can be used on existing strings
    -Can only be taught be Black Uchiha

    ±± Declined ±± Take out the damage. The technique is intended to add properties to your puppets...not to actually attack or defend with. Also, water would make it have a sticky effect and earth would make the weapons heavier and with higher impact. Other than that seems ok ^^


    The Great Dragon Collection is a collection of puppets in dragon from. This collection consist of 4 cardinal dragons (Thundra, Flame, Breeze, and Typhoon), the Dragon Knight puppet armor, and the rampage dragon (Dragoon)

    (Ningyō no yoroi: Doragon'naito) Puppet Armor: Dragon Knight
    Type: Weapon/Puppet
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user summons the Dragon Knight puppet of the Great Dragon collection. It is a fully functional puppet equipped with a trident, but it’s main function is to house the user in its tough armor. This armor is strong enough to withstand A-rank attacks (2 only). The outside is made of metal and the inside is lined with an insulator to defuse lightning techs. The hands have slight holes in the fingertips so the user can control other puppets from within. After Dragon Knight’s use(5 turns) the armor becomes unusable and falls off the user but the wings can later be merged into a smaller (5ft) bladed puppet(C-rank last until destroyed) called Blade (can also be used before DK’s end).
    -Can only be summoned once per battle
    -Can only withstand 2 A-rank attacks
    -Puppet becomes unusable after 5 turns
    -Once Blade is used the Dragon Knight becomes unusable
    -Can’t summon any puppets for 1 turn
    -Can only be taught/given by Black Uchiha







    ±± Declined ±± 2 A-Rank attacks is too much IMO. Also, since this is a puppet and we are on a description based forum game, you need to actually describe the size, shape and some details of the puppet so that your enemies know what it looks like and how to counter it. Relying on a picture isn't the best way. The picture should be a supplement; an aid. Not the primary source of information on what the puppet is like.And btw, i almost forgot...wings...can it fly?

    (Seiyō no doragon: Burīzu) Dragon of the West: Breeze
    Type: Weapon/Puppet
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 60/30 (A-rank/C-rank)
    Description: The user summons Breeze a dragon of the Great Dragon collection. Breeze is 10ft tall, and light blue colored. It has shuriken for scales, from head to tail, that can be shot at the opponent (C-rank). Breeze is a pressurized puppet (like an aerosol can) filled with air, in such, produces A-rank wind, capable of being shot from Breeze’s mouth (3 times) in a blast or stream or sent through its wings. Also, has the standard hidden puppet weapons.
    -Can only be summoned once per battle
    -Can only shoot Wind 3 times (equal to A-rank)
    -Puppet becomes unusable after 4 turns
    -Wind attacks count as one of the 3 moves
    -Can only control 1 other puppet while in use
    -Can’t summon any puppets for 1 turn
    -Can only be taught/given by Black Uchiha




    ±± Declined ±± Range of the wind blasts? Are the wind blasts sharp? dull? How many times can you shoot the shuriken? Range?again, wings...can it fly?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Hyōton: Aisu Gia) - Ice Release: Ice Gear
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user focuses a large amount of ice chakra throughout the body and forms a range of four hand seals, releasing it in an enormous pressure through the body causing the both legs and hands to take a freezed ice form whatever the user touch freezes in a few seconds this also includes that touched objects can do the same. And also incasing his/her body in an icy aura this aura is cold enough to withstand fire attacks up, to A-Rank and below.

    ♦ Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    ♦ Note: The user must have mastered Hyōton to use this jutsu.
    ♦ Note: The user must be Kage rank or above to use this jutsu.
    ♦ Note: This jutsu lasts for three turns.
    ♦ Note: The user can't use his/her hands and legs for one turn afterwards, due to the numbness.
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by Karyuu.

    ±± Declined ±± First thing, don't add useless restrictions just to add up. Being only usable by Kage ranked and above is useless for the restriction of the technique itself. Second, describe the bold. If you mean you can freeze an enemy completely by simply touching him then its a no no...I guess you can figure out why.


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    (Yōton: Maguma Engi) - Lava Release: Magma Expansion
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user grabs a rock from the ground (the size of a football) and then the user focuses a large amount of fire and earth chakra into the rock, to the point it heats up but not turning to the liquid form, afterwards throwing it at the target(s) with a enormous force as it flies tords the target getting into close range of the enemy the user swiftly forms the dragon handseal expanding the rock reaching out to medium range above the opponent(s) creating a magma boulder above the enemy trapping him/her under it.

    Note: The user must have mastered the lava element inorder to use this jutsu.
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by Karyuu.
    ♦ Note: The user can't perform any lava technique's for the next turn.
    ♦ Note: Can only be used three times per battle.


    ±± Declined ±± Again with the useless restrictions. Off course he has to have mastered Lava...its an S-Rank. Don't add restrictions just to seem the jutsu is restricted when its not. And the boulder size is too much. And a boulder of scolding rock sent towards the enemy? were did i hear that...I wonder...
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Ejji-jō de) - Earth release: On the Edge
    Rank: C
    Type: Attack
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user will make the Boar hand seal and a small narrow spike will emerge from the ground in the shape of a spear rather than a cone. Unlike the regular Earth Spike technique, this jutsu cause almost no vibration on the earth as it emerge from the ground. Since the spike in itself isn't much bigger than a medium sized sword, it isn't extremely hard and can't pierce through regular armors.
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Ai no hito Ai no pekku poppu) Man of love: pec pop of love
    Rank: A
    Chakra: none
    Range: Short - Mid
    Type: supp
    Description: After using the man of love jutsu, the user will stand in front of the victim with feet apart, hands on his waist and chest out. the user will then stare dead into the victim and flexes his chest, seducing the victim even more.
    it will also deflect projectiles




    ±± Pending ±± Well...the template isn't right...and...well i don't even know what to do with this so i'm leaving it for another mod.O_o

    Edit: ±± Declined ±± After talking to Rag, it was declined
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Hyougo: Tokuhei)- Glacier Style: Sheilding Wall
    Type: Deff
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: The user will bring their sword to their side (about waist height) focus wind and water chakra into their blade, and swing their sword in an arc around the front half of their body, releasing wind and water chakra from their sword, creating a slanted wall of layered ice that, holds a 70 degree angle from the ground to the top of the wall, that stands at 7 ft, that can with stand fire of the same rank without any melting.
    - Can be used 2 times per battle.
    - Must have a Yuki Bio.
    - Must have permission from -Tauburn- to use.

    ±± Declined ±± Well, the idea is cool. However, look at the bolded part. An S-Rank fire either concentrated or big enough could overcome this wall of ice. Ice is strong against Fire but strong fire can still overcome it. Reword it a bit. Also, add one resctrition more like "Can't perform any other Ice Techniques in the same turn" or something around those lines.

    ♆Hyouga: Hachi Ken no Ringu (Glacier Style: 8 Sword Ring)♆
    Type: Defense/Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user channels Water and Wind Chakra into a bladed weapon while holding it in front of them with the blade facing straight upwards. A ring of 8 transparent ice swords will surround the user’s waist, constantly swirling over the user’s body, protecting the user from physical attacks. The user can also send from 2 to 4 swords at B Rank towards a target per turn. The ice swords, as they are transparent, are nearly invisible at a distance (Mid – Long), and difficult to dodge or see until they are very close (Short).
    - Can only be used 5 times per battle.
    - Must be a member who has learned Glaicer Style.


    ±± Declined ±± Restrictions? Also, at what range can you create the blades from you? Nearly invisible at the distance...hum...

    (Hyouton: Kusari Koumori)- Ice Release: Chained Maces
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will focus Water and wind chakra from their arm, munipulating the Wind and Water into Ice, then molding the Ice into a three maces connected by a chain which connects to the users arm. The user can then swing the maces around, and by adding more water and wind chakra the maces will grow and shrink to the users will, Only able to reach up to Mid range.
    - Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    - Must be a member of the yuki clan.


    ±± Declined ±± Resctritions? How much can they increase in size?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suna : Poppubeibaku) - Sand Style : Popcorn
    Type : Supplementary
    Rank : B
    Range : Mid - Long
    Chakra cost : 30
    Damage points : N/A
    Description : The user will first bring out a handful of deeply, fire chakra-infused sand particles which can be infused and brought beforehand or made within a turn's time. These sand particles aren't normal and are slightly larger than regular sand particles due to expansion caused by the fire-chakra. The user will then launch those sand particles into the air above and once it has reached the edge of short-range from the user, it falls back down onto the ground from the start of mid till the end of long-range. As they crash onto the ground, the friction produced causes them to pop into multiply pieces. Works best to confuse the enemy and cause noise-chaos. This in time covers the field in front of the user but is not capable of covering the area around the user sadly.

    Note : Only covers mid to long-range
    Note : Can only be used thrice per battle
    Note : Can only be used by all sand users
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Special-heated sand can be added to biography
    Note : Does not have the capability to burn if it touches anybody
    Note : If user does not have the special sand, he can heat a handful of sand particles on the spot but it takes at least a turn till ready

    ±± Pending ±± Have you submitted this "special heated sand"? Also, don't add useless resctritions. Off course it can be used by a sand user...its a sand technique... Answer me through vm to the above question so i can recheck it later. I actually don't see the point in this one though...

    (Fuuton : Sakashimakadou) - Wind Release : Reversed Vortex
    Type : Offensive
    Rank : A
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 35
    Damage points : 70
    Description : The user will gather his/her wind chakra into the palm of either their right or left hand. Once thats done, a little ball of wind invisible to the naked eye will form onto the palm. The user will then slam that hand down onto the ground, smashing the tiny wind ball into the ground. With that, the wind ball is sent flying down into the ground and the user will be able to manipulate where it goes. In a matter of seconds, depending on where the user sends it, the wind ball will then transform into a vortex of wind that spins underground instead. Due to this, whatever that stands above the area that the reversed wind vortex is spinning will be forced to fall flat onto the ground due to the wind pulling in.

    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : The wind vortex is about six meters wide
    Note : Dojutsus will be able to notice the tiny wind ball
    Note : No wind techniques A-rank or above may be used the same turn

    ±± Declined ±± How can you send the wind ball underground? How can the wind ball retain its shape while traveling underground? The description needs work.

    (Suiton : Reiboukiri) - Water Release : Cooling Mist
    Type : Defensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short
    Rank : Forbidden
    Chakra cost : 50
    Damage points : 70 (to self) (10 if used to defend against fire)
    Description : The user will clap his hands together and exhale out a misty gas which was originally his breathe but has been deeply concentrated with water chakra till the point of turning to water vapor instead. This mist is extremely cold and can harm the user if stayed within a long period of time. (Say about at least 5 minutes) This technique is often and probably only used when up against an extremely, destructive fire technique. Once fire techniques touched the mist, they would neutralized each other and eventually, the fire technique fades away before touching the user. The fire technique would heat up the user's surrounding temperature hence avoiding a severe frostbite.

    Note : Can only be used once per battle
    Note : Cannot be used when around the enemy
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Must have mastered the water element
    Note : User may not use water techniques in the same turn or the turn after
    Note : If user manages to successfully avoid severe frostbite, he still has reduced handseal speed due to the cold for two turns and may not run
    Note : If user is left within the untouched mist, he will suffer from severe frostbite
    Note : When inflicted with severe frostbite, user will only be able to survive for two more turns before passing out
    Note : During the period of severe frostbite, the user will only be able to perform two techniques per turn
    Note : Cannot move legs and has reduced handseal speed due to the slow blood circulation within the body

    ±± Declined ±± How can you make the water that cold? to do so you need to infuse it with wind chakra at least. Also, the definition of mist is that its heated up water, not cold. so make a freezing mist you'd need to constantly fuel water and wind chakras into it making it actually an Ice technique. But even if we overcome that detail, you have the same mistake most users have. Useless restrictions just to see if it gets approved. lol But, as for the concept of a freezing mist capable of stopping a Fire technique i disagree. The mist has no mass or form, meaning it can't possibly stop a fire projectile. Unless this mist dropped the atmospheric temperature to a severe low level which is impossible without ICE KG.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Hyouton: Kōri no Capades (Ice Release: Black Ice Capades)
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 25
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user channels Hyouton chakra into their feet creating Ice Skates made of Black Ice. When used on Ice or Snow, increases the speed of the user to that of Rock Lee without weights. As long as the skates are touching Snow or Ice, the skates will last. The moment it touches a surface/terrain made of anything other than snow or ice, the skates will dissipate. The Ice Skates are very sharp and can be used as an effective taijutsu component.
    Note: Can only be used on an Ice or Snow surface/terrain.

    ±± Declined ±± Rock lee without weights and without restrictions? this is not a b-rank. Also, in Snow this wouldn't work. Snow isn't a solid surface so skates wouldn't work on it. Work on it more.

    Hyouton: Kuroi yuki [Ice Release: Black Snow Technique]
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Long
    Chakra: 15
    Damage: +20 to all jutsu made from Black Snow
    Description: The user, having used Ice Release: Glazed Black Ice Intrusion along with Ice Release: Ice Technique(making it snow) , makes black snow fall across the entire terrain. The snow maintains the properties of Glazed Black Ice Intrusion, allowing all ice techniques made from the black snow will have the extra resistance to lightning (takes a lightning jutsu of the same rank to cancel out any jutsu made from black snow) and a +20 damage to all black ice jutsu as a result.
    Note: The user, can use this jutsu in place of creating Glazed Black Ice Intrusion and Ice Technique(to make it snow only).
    Note: Counts as 2/3 moves in a turn
    Note: Other precipitation techniques (rain, snow etc) cannot be used or cancel out Black Snow unless it is of a higher Rank.
    Note: only the user of this technique can create other jutsu out of the Black Snow. To gain this effect.
    Note: Another Ice user can post Glazed Black Ice Intrusion to use techniques from the black snow.
    Note: Must be taught by Oraan Nguyen

    ±± Declined ±± The description does quite work out. Your objective is to make black snow fall? If so, why do you need to use the other two techniques? This needs a lot of work..

    Hyouton: Kuroi Yuki Hyō [Ice Release: Black Snow Leopard]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: the user, after having created black snow, forms 2 handseals and creates a large 10 foot tall leopard out of the black snow. The Black Snow Leopard is only capable of being formed on an area that has black snow already on it. The leopard, being is incredibly fast, and stands at 5 feet when on all fours and is capable of taking Fire Damage up to A Rank without melting. This is normally used when a quick attack is needed to unsettle an opponent, causing them to focus more on the cheetah than the user from its Raw Speed. The Leopard moves at the speed of Rock Lee without Weights as long as it remains running on Black Snow. When not on black snow, the Leopard runs at the speed equivalent to that of it's creator.
    Note: Can only be used 3x per battle.
    Note: Can only be used after Ice Release: Glazed Black Ice Intrusion and Ice Release: Ice Technique (Snow) are formed (The combination of techniques makes Black Snow Technique.)
    Note: Due to being formed of Glazed Black Ice Intrusion, Black Snow Cheetah retains the Lightning Resistance of the technique as well.
    Note: Must be taught by Oraan Nguyen

    ±± Declined ±± 3 times is too much for this. Also, how long can it stay in play? can it take the damage of more than one A-Rank fire? Even if he does take the damage of one A-Rank fire, he will still be weakened.


    Hyouton: Garasubari no Kuroi Kōri no Shin'nyū) Ice Release: Glazed Black Ice Intrusion
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+30 per turn)
    Damage: +20 damage to jutsu
    Description: The user creates black ice that surrounds all the user's earth techniques and ice (that aren't already black), giving it a stronger resistance to lightning (takes Lightning of the same rank as to cancel out the technique instead of one rank lower). The Glazed Black Ice isnt unnoticable, but it can be seen with a keen eye. The way it catches people of guard is in their carelessness.
    Note: Can only be used 2x per battle
    Note: User must wait 3 turns for each use
    Note: User cannot use Ice or Earth above A Rank
    Note: Can only be used with 2 Earth techniques and 2 Ice Techniques.
    Note: User cannot use Black Ice Techniques until the user has completed 2 Earth techniques and 2 Ice techniques.
    Note: Must be taught by Oraan Nguyen.


    ±± When submitting a reference technique like this one, ALWAYS submit the link to its approval and a small note stating that its the reference to the technique mentioned above. ±±
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-06-2012 at 11:02 PM.

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