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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Bakuton: Kibaku Shiroi Ne no Ki)- Explosion Release: Explosive White Root tree
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user will put a single hand in their side pouches filled with clay, and begin to mold and shape it. Then, they will release the explosive clay into the ground, keeping it connected to his hand, where they are able to grow a single explosive clay tree anywhere on the battlefield. The explosive clay tree has a circumference of eight feet, and is around twelve feet tall. Its roots also extend into the ground ten feet deep, and ten feet in any direction of the tree. At any time after the explosive clay tree has been created, it can be detonated by performing the Tiger hand seal, and by yelling, "Katsu!". Blast radius covers the area short range around the tree.
    *Note: Must have a Deidara biography
    *Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
    *Note: Usable three times per battle
    Declined this is not a B rank level technique and should be higher ranked
    (Bakuton: Kibaku Shiroi Ne no Ki)- Explosion Release: Explosive White Root tree
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60

    Description: The user will put a single hand in their side pouches filled with clay, and begin to mold and shape it. Then, they will release the explosive clay into the ground, keeping it connected to his hand, where they are able to grow a single explosive clay tree anywhere on the battlefield. The explosive clay tree has a circumference of eight feet, and is around ten feet tall. Its roots also extend into the ground ten feet deep, and ten feet in any direction of the tree. At any time after the explosive clay tree has been created, it can be detonated by performing the Tiger hand seal, and by yelling, "Katsu!". Blast radius covers the area short range around the tree.
    *Note: Must have a Deidara biography
    *Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
    *Note: Usable twice per battle

    Up one rank, down to two times per battle.

    ±± Approved ±±

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    (Katon: Kaen no Tenjō)- Flame Ceiling
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: B
    Range: Mid/Long
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 50
    Description: Performing one handseal, the user creates a 4x4 foot, flat square wall of flame above the opponent. Then performing another hand seal, the flame ceiling will then drop down sixteen pillars of flame (16sq. ft) quickly, similar to the bars on a cage. This technique is used as a cage, but because of the heat of the flames, the opponent may suffer highly serious burns due to the proximity of the flames.
    *Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile

    ~Approved~
    (Katon: Bureizu no Kēji o Sakujo)- Dropping Blaze Cage
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid/Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60

    Description: Performing two hand seals, the user creates a 10x10 foot, flat square wall of flame above the opponent. Then performing another hand seal, the flame ceiling will then drop down twenty pillars of flame (5 on each side) quickly, similar to the bars on a cage. This technique is used as a cage, but because of the heat of the flames, the opponent may suffer highly serious burns due to the proximity of the flames.
    *Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile
    *Note: Usable two times per battle
    *Note: No other fire techniques to be used on the same turn

    Update on Technique:
    Up one rank, slight description alteration, added a usage restriction

    ±± Approved ±± Added a restriction

    (Bakuton: Hakucho-nushi no kureimanto)- Explosion Release: The Clay Cloak of the White Butterfly Lord
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will place both hands into their side pouches filled with clay, and then release the clay from their palms onto their entire body. After the clay layer fully encases the body, the user will retract it, forming a white cloak that is split into four sections at the waist. The cloak is incredibly effective at blocking physical attacks, having the ability to fully block B-rank and lower taijutsu and kenjutsu techniques. This is due to the density of the cloak, and the the ability to absorb heavy impacts. Even the momentum from attacks is slowed, leaving only a small transfer of energy to the actual user's body. Being partly earth based, it it also very resistant to water, having the ability to fully defend against water A-rank and lower. However, due to its natural weakness to lightning, a direct B-rank attack will destroy the cloak. The user will also experience increased speed of 1.25x, due to the aerodynamic cloak.
    *Note: Must have a Deidara biography
    *Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
    *Note: Usable twice per battle; Lasts for 4 turns
    *Note: Can block up to 2 techniques total, before it begins to crack and fall away; (Any mix of Tai/Ken/Suiton)



    ^ I do not want to increase the rank of this technique, so please include in your critique how I can make it approvable if its not, for an A-rank technique.

    ±± Declined ±± Let me see if i understand: you are encasing yourself in explosive clay that then transforms into a cloak which you intend to use for protection from impacts and jutsu while making you faster by making you more aerodynamic? O_o Take the increased speed part. Reword the first part i bold and make it simpler.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Ōkina suna no hyōtan| greater sand gourd
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: short-long
    Chakra Cost: N/a ( -40 if summoned -20 per turn )
    Damage Points: N/a
    Description: The user places there hand on the ground, preforming the summoning jutsu to summon a giant pot. The pot is very large with the love kanji in red on the front and the back. It has a white rope near the top which can be used to carry the sand pot. the pot is made out of sand, but those without a dojutsu could not see this as it has close resemblance to the Kohaku no Jōhei. The pot is filled with a large quantity of sand that is already infused with the users chakra. The sand in this gourd much faster than regular sand carried in a regular sand gourd. Whenever sand is needed the gourd automatically activates. Due to this sand already being infused with the users chakra, they can control and manipulate it almost instantly to suit their needs. Though, this sand doesn't have kaurura's love so the shield of sand isn't automatic with this sand.
    Note1: the gourd automatically refills itself with sand
    Note2: can only refill itself three times
    Note3: the user doesn't have to summon if carried into battle in the beginning
    don't laugh >.>


    ±± Declined ±± I won't allow anyone to submit ripoffs or blunt upgrades of already powerful cannon techniques. Note that what you did is against the rules and i could ban you for a whole week.

    jiton: satetsu nami no jutsu | Gold dust shower
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/a
    Description: The User uses Gold Dust hardened into minuscule grains, to attack simultaneously across a vast range.Using the repellent force of magnetism, the speed of the bullets is rapidly increased after they are shot. Furthermore, the user can also use the magnetic force to make the bullets grow into senbon as they move across the terrain.
    Note: can only be used by the fourth kazekage

    ±± Declined ±± Were did the bullets come from? do you shape the Gold Dust into bullets so that you can then use? Also, note that this isn't a b-rank. And how many can you do? average size, give or take?

    Jikashu: sakin mesai | Gold Dust blinding
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description:The User preforms the snake hand-seal and has a large quantity of Gold Dust come forth from the ground under the opponent and sends towards an enemy, which due to its luminous quality, can blind the opponent. the user can also adjust the brightness of it.

    ±± Declined ±± restrictions? Work on the description. Its too...vague and information is missing describing how this happens actually

    Feel free to edit^^
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-07-2012 at 09:12 PM. Reason: Gold Dust

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton: Kō masatsu no tekunikku) Water release: Anti-Friction technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: An experienced user of water release begins by gathering chakra inside of their body. Once enough chakra is gathered, user will release it from their pores. When the chakra is being released the user will focus on converting the chakra into an oil like liquid that covers their whole body. The purpose of this liquid is to work as a friction reducer, lowering it to almost zero. When covered in the liquid, the user is able to glide on the ground.
    Note: Makes the user covered in the liquid weaker to lightning jutsu
    Note: The user is unable to use fire, unless he is willing to risk evaporating the liquid.
    Note: Can only be taught by Passion and Doctor Kaguya

    ±± Declined ±± Chakra info is wrong for a b-rank. If you use this technique, how can you stand on your feet? Note that this would only be usable on certain grounds, not for example in snow or sand. You'd be unable to hold weapons, grab things, etc. Work on it a bit more.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-07-2012 at 09:15 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Genjutsu: Omoi no Kamui | Illusionary Arts: The Mind of Creation
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    A powerfull technique were the user takes control of the enemy's 5 senses and makes him experience anything he can imagine. These illusions may cause the enemy pain or distress or simply serve as a distraction or to camouflage the user in an escape or an attack. The genjutsu itself is done by performing 3 hand seals (Tiger+Ram+Horse) while inserting your chakra into the enemy's brain, disturbing his chakra flow and quickly gaining control over his senses. If the user is within short range of the enemy he can perform this technique with either 1 hand seal (Ram) or by looking directly into the enemy's eyes.

    Note: Can only be used thrice per battle
    Note2: User can't perform other Genjutsu in the same turn
    Note3: User can't perform any technique above S-Rank on the same turn
    Note4: Can only be taught by Scorps
    ____________
    -Declined-
    too general

    Genjutsu: Magirawashii no Serifu | Illusionary Arts: The Misleading Words
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    A simple but powerful illusion that is used immediately before an elemental technique. The user does one hand seal (Tiger, Ram or Horse) before the ones required for the elemental technique that follows. The result is that the enemy will see the next released technique as that of another element. However, to perfect the illusion, the user must train and have the ability to string the hand seal of the genjutsu with the ones of the elemental technique so that they seem to be only one set of hand seals.

    Note: Usable 4 times
    Note2: Can only be used before techniques of the 5 basic elements that the user knows
    Note3: Can only use up to S-Rank on the same turn its used
    Note4: Can only be taught by Scorps
    ____________
    -Approved-
     
         
    Last edited by Nexus; 02-07-2012 at 01:14 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Gogyou sutairu: honoo sutebachi)Fire Style:Flame Desperation
    Type:Attack
    Rank:B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:25
    Chakra Damage:50
    Description:The User Does 1 hand seal then Palm His hands on the ground. He then Channels his fire chakra through the ground towards the opponent underground. Fire will then Raise out of the ground from under the opponent. Making the opponent legs catch on fire. Giving his Leg 2nd Degree burn. Making it hard for him to dodge or walk after the burning.

    -Brothers In Arms Can Use-
    -~Uchiha Clan~ Can Use-

    ±± Declined ±± this is not a B-Rank. Wrong name. Its a Katon technique. Chakra damage? use the correct template. Also, you can make flames come from beneath your opponent but if they burn or not his legs is something you can't predict unless you make it so that the fire is designed to wrap around his legs. Also, note that the ground would show indications of what is about to happen right before it happens, if you get my drift.

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    (jisei sutairu:shukakutentou) Magnetism Style: Similars Dont Attract
    Type: Defense
    Rank:S
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:50
    Chakra Damage:None
    Description: The user does 2 handseals then puts his/her hand on the ground to get a feel for the earth magnetic field. The user then surrounds his/her body with the same magnetic field as the earth repulsing any earth that comes near him/her that contains metal in it Or Gold/Iron Sand. Also making it that the user floats in air (About 4inches) due to the user body being covered in the same magnetic energy as the earth. Repulsing each other . (North and North. Or South and South)

    -Cant use any Earth On the same turn as this-
    -Can Only use Twice-
    -Can Use Any Magnetism Techs The Same turn as This-
    -This Stays Active the Whole turn you use it in-
    -Only usable by Teno-

    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Jiton are the names of Magnetism techniques. Again, chakra damage? Use the correct template. Also, this technique is too similar to the gravity manipulation techniques of the Deva Path. This is in theory possible (albeit your technique would need lots of work to be approved and is severely and utterly OP) but it collides with the cannon abilities of the Deva Path making it impossible to approve or even work on.
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    Jisei sutairu:Jisei Electrons
    Type:Attack/Supplementary
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Chakra Damage:40(Not really an attack jutsu)
    Description: The User does 3handseals, then send their Chakra filled with magnetic energy through the ground towards the opponent. The magnetic energy will then react to the opponent electrons in their body very harshly. Causing the electrons in the opponent body to spin rapidly out of control causing the electrons in the opponent body to to explode and stop overall. Making the opponent not able to send messages to the brain. Meaning the opponent can not move nor react to a jutsu. NOTE. This is NOT a genjutsu

    -Can only use once-
    -Cant Use any Genjutsu throughout the whole battle if this is used-
    -Cant Use Any Ninjutsu for 3turns-
    -After The use of this. User cant use any Magnetism For 2turns-
    -Only Usable by Teno

    (edit whatever)

    ±± Declined ±± I can't believe this is the first time i'm going to actually said this but overpowered and unrealistic. To create such a magnetic field would be practically impossible. And, if your stop the electrons in the enemies body, thats not what happens... Its more like, you know...BOOM? Dematerialization? One more chance to make this work although its not salvageable in my opinion. And one more time...use proper template.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-07-2012 at 09:31 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Fire style: Rain of Hell(katon: Jigoku no ame)
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offence
    Range: All
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: 90(15 to user)
    Description: This jutsu is actually a Fire-Water combo. The user makes about 15 hand-seals while he shoots a colorful, blazing, gigantic flame into the air. When the hand-seals are complete oil starts to rain from the sky like a large scale (Suiton: Kokuun) - Water Style: Black Clouds these oil droplets mix with the fire the user is sending up to the sky. This makes it rain fire drops effecting the entire field except for the source of the fire and short range around it.(so basically the area around the user is unaffected) This jutsu is even more deadly around grassy/forest/jungle terrain as it can cause additional fires. To keep the rain going the user has to keep shooting the giant flame to the sky which puts great strain on the body dealing 15 damage to the user once the jutsu ends.
    *The user can keep the rain for a total of 3 turns(so its ends at the end of the opponents 3rd turn, after this jutsu is used)
    *The user can't use any jutsu while the rain is happening as he has to keep the flame
    *The user and clones/bodies can't use Forbidden rank jutsu and S-rank fire jutsu for 3 turns after the rain ends
    *the user can end the rain at any time during the 3 turns
    *The user and clones/bodies can't use any fire rank jutsu while the rain is in effect
    *can only be used once per battle

    ±± Declined ±± Firstly and foremost, its severely overpowered. Second, why is this a forbidden rank technique? its been said many times before that you need to have physical damage and consequences when using a forbidden rank technique. Having 15 damage to the user is meaningless in the rp. Also, look at the word i bolded. If you are channeling 2 elemental chakras at the same time then you need yin/yang mastery. To make this work you need to reword the description in a way that you are first using Water Chakra for the oil and then Fire Chakra to ignite it. In two different stages. And by doing so and keeping the idea of it being forbidden it will count as 2 moves on your turn. This needs a lot of work. The reason i didn't DNR it is only because i want to give you one chance to make it work.


    Fire style: Godly Protection(katon: Keiken'na hogo)
    Rank:S
    Range: Short
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Chakra Cost: 40(additional -10 per each turn it's kept in effect)
    Damage: Non
    Description: The user does the tiger hand-seal and gathers immense amounts of flame chakra in his dominant hand. Then the user covers his body with a layer of chakra and slams his hand with the fire chakra to the ground. Instantly a orange-yellow fire comes out of the ground burning the area up to the users head. It burns anything up to 45cm away from the user in all directions (except above). The user is protected by the layer of chakra he created. The fire increases the temp of the area around the user greatly, because of that the fire can only be kept for 3 turn. During the 3 turns the user is protected from any A-rank or below wind jutsu and any B-rank or below Ice jutsu from all directions except above.
    *the user can still see and spew things from his mouth inside the fire(it burns up to his face)
    *The user can't use wind or Ice jutsu while the fire is active
    *If the user uses any water type jutsu it will cancel out the fire(also the power of the water jutsu will be decreased by 2 ranks)
    *can only be used once per battle

    ±± Declined ±± Severely overpowered for even an S-Rank technique. This one needs a lot of work. You need to figure out what you want for it exactly.

    Earth Style: Small Cutters(Doton: Kogata kattā)
    Rank: A
    Range: All at the same time
    Type: Supplementary
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: near nothing
    Description: The user does 3 hand-seals and slams his hand into the ground. His chakra quickly travels through the surface of the earth and covers the entire field. Then the user makes small pieces of earth come out of the ground(4mm^3). One attacks the opponent making a small flesh wound on his/her skin(deals as little damage as a bee sting). Then the small piece of earth with the opponents blood comes back to the user's hand. The user can create multiple earth pieces come and hit multiple opponents, no more then 1 piece can hit 1 target. The user can make pieces all around the opponent to hit him/her if he/she tries to escape. The main reason for this attack would be to draw out blood and get a sample so a summon with a sensitive nose can track the opponent.
    *Can only be used 3 times per battle
    *The attack doesn't disperse clones
    *Hidan bios and bios with blood CE can't use this jutsu

    ±± Declined ±± The idea is quite interesting but you need to make sure the tiny earth particles are somewhat visible. At that size they aren't. And, you wouldn't need Blood to trrack someone. Only something with the enemy's smell.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kiri Terepo-to no Jutsu) - Mist Teleportation Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: While user's mist is in play, his chakra is present throughout the mist. So user focuses anywhere in the mist and teleports wherever he wishes to, within the mist.
    Note: -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Bolt.

    Declined, do not resubmit, no teleportation techniques are allowed to be submitted for custom techniques
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Last submission on the 16th.

    Yoroi Dageki Matsugo: (Armour strike of death)
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user has mini spikes on his armours front and back, these spikes look like something he'd use to peirce his enemy when they are within touching range but however the user can channel his chakra into the mini spikes and causes the chakra to extend from the spikes and pierce his enemies even if they are not within touching range.
    Note: Can only be taught by RockLeeGreenBeast
    Note: Can only be used by a samurai.
    Note: Can only be used 2 times.
    Note: The user can't use it for the next 2 turns after using it once.

    ±± Declined ±± Look at the bolded. Were do these spikes come from? Not all armors have them. Also, this is a Ninjutsu. Something Samurais can't use.

    Custom Weapon.

    Kaji Katana : Fire Blade
    Rank:S
    Type: Weapon - Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra: (+20 for fire jutsus rank A and above deflected, +15 for any Earth jutsu cut)
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The Fire blade looks like an ordinary blade, with leather straps surrounding the area where the user holds it from, the leather is not ordinary leather as it is - for an unknown reason it is not able to burn. It has a sharp tip which is useful against opponents at close range. The blade also has the ability to deflect small fire jutsus ranked A and lower without difficulty. Furthermore due to its sharp tip the sword is able to cut through Earth jutsus ranked B and lower.
    Note: Fire deflection counts as one of the users move.
    Note: Fire deflection jutsu can be used 3 times.
    Note: The blade can only be wielded by RockLeeGreenBeast.
    Note: By Hard materials I mean Earth jutsus ranked B and lower.
    Note: The cutting of Earth jutsus ranked B and lower counts as a move.
    Note: Cutting Earth can only be done 3 times.
    Dropping the above for:

    Sono Kouhi Ichiyou Raikou: (The Queen of Lightning)
    Rank:S
    Type: Weapon - Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra: +20 Each time chakra boost is used.
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The queen of lightning is a blade which was forged on the highest mountains of kumogakure, and during its time in the mountains it was said to have been struck my lightning multiple times and due to this it has high amounts of lightning channeled within it and is constantly at that state. (much like this jutsu (Chō Biburāto Raitontō) - Super Vibrating Lightning Release Sword). The blade is able to cut any A ranked earth objects with ease, due to its natural affinity to lighting. A feature the blade had is that it has a considerably long hilt, and on the hilt it has 2 considerably large holes at the base and another 2 at each side of the hilt so 8 holes overall not including the 2 at the base. (near the bottom area, so the users hand are not covering the holes), nobody knew why the holes were and most people thought it was only due to the old age of the blade, however when the user requires her too, The queen of lightning is able to release boosts of normal chakra out from those holes. The chakra that comes out is nor harmful to anyone and if it does connect with the opponent it merely pushes them back with blunt force and nothing more, however the chakra release is able to speed the swing of the blade. For example the user could be swinging the blade from high up in the air downwards, the blade then releases chakra from the two holes at the top of the hilt and push the blade downwards so the blade comes with even more speed and force then it might have normally come down with.
    Note: The chakra boost to increase the users speed can be used as many times as you like but you have to wait 2 turns after using it each time.
    Note: Can only be wielded by RockLeeGreenBeast.
    Note: You can cut through Earth jutsus ranked A 2 times.
    Note: You can cut through Earth jutsus ranked B and C 4 times.
    Note: Chakra boost increases the swing of the sword to the speed of Rock Lees movements without his leg weights.
    Note: If someone else was to pick up the sword, the lightning from the sword would electrocute them.

    ±± Declined, do not resubmitt ±± As said before, many weapons like this already exist.

    Summoning Animal: Kangaroo
    Scroll Owner: RockLeeGreenBeast
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A

    ±± Declined, do not resubmit ±± Contract already exists. Doing a search before posting a custom animal summon is essential http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...oo#post2159372
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Ninjutsu: Reikon Eater) - Soul Eater
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User after performing 5 handseals releases his pure chakra from each and every spore of his body and creates a dense sphere around him which is so strong that can protect the user from any Ranks jutsu till the sphere is around his body.
    Note: ~Sphere lasts for maximum 2 turns and can be cancelled by making 1 handseal.
    ~Sphere can block a maximum of 3 attacks, after which chakra start despersing.
    ~While sphere is active, user can only use those jutsus which does not originate from user's body. (eg. he can't use "rasengan" or some wind or fire jutsu which he shoots from mouth)
    ~Due to excess release of pure chakra, user can't use any S-Rank or above technique for next 2 turns after sphere becomes inactive.
    ~Can only be used twice per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ OP.
    (Ninjutsu: Reikon Eater) - Soul Eater
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40 [+20 for each turn]
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User after performing 5 handseals user releases his pure chakra from each and every spore of his body and creates a dense sphere around him which is so strong that can protect the user from Jutsus.
    Note: ~Sphere lasts for maximum 2 turns.
    ~Sphere can block a maximum of 2 attacks, after which chakra start despersing.
    ~Sphere can block any rank's jutsu for only 1 time, and other upto S-rank.
    ~While sphere is active, user can only use those jutsus which does not originate from user's body. (eg. he can't use "rasengan" or some wind or fire jutsu which he shoots from mouth)
    ~Due to excess release of pure chakra, user can't use any S-Rank or above technique in his next turn after sphere becomes inactive.
    ~Can only be used twice per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.


    ±± Declined, do not resubmitt ±± I'm training you in Ninjutsu... You haven't yet reached s-rank

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    Since this jutsu counts as my 4 moves, and can block only 1 jutsu, so i am updating it and making it a lil bit OP , as i am also restricting that i will only be able to use 2 moves per turn.

    (Ketteiteki Benso) - Ultimate Defense
    Type: Defense
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50 (+30 for every turn i.e. +10 for each)
    Damage Points: 90 (if someone tries to cross it) [-30 to user]
    Description: After creating 3 shadow clones, one clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra in it to create a shield of hollow sphere around themselves of 10m radius, whose small part is below the earh, so from above the surface it looks like a dome. This shield can block any no. of jutsus upto forbidden rank till the time it is active, and for that clones must continue to release their respective chakras in the dome. As user will be trapped inside that dome, so for attacking purpose he can make a single handseal, so that a appropriate size of hole/opening will be made in the dome and from which he can use his jutsu on his target and than again by making a single handseal, the hole/opening closes.
    Note: ~User must create atleast 3 shadow clones before using this jutsu.
    ~This technique lasts 3 turns.
    ~If one clone is made to poofed away, than the ability of dome will be decreased and thus it can block two rank lesser techniques i.e. upto A-rank, and if two clones than upto B-rank. And if all three clones, than this technique ends right there.
    ~Opponent can't use the earth below the user, which is in sphere for any purpose. As that earth is separated from the main earth, due to lightning chakra from sphere, neither user can use the earth below him to slam his hands on the earth to manipulate the earth outside the sphere.
    ~User can only use 2 moves each turn due to excessive chakra used.

    ~Counts as 3 moves in the user's turn.
    ~ -30 damage to user due to excessive amount of chakra used.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ Even if it took the remainders of your turns for the match and caused you to die after using it I wouldn't approve a technique that can block absolutely anything. Ever.
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    (Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus blocking any jutsu upto S-Rank (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank) and can take on one more attack.
    Note:~Can't use any earth jutsu of S-rank and above in same turn.
    ~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
    ~Can be used 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
    Resubmitting

    (Ketteiteki Benso) - Ultimate Defense
    Type: Defense
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50 (+30 for every turn i.e. +10 for each clone)
    Damage Points: 90 (if someone tries to cross it) [-30 to user]
    Description: After creating 3 shadow clones, one clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra in it to create a shield of hollow sphere around themselves of 10m radius, whose small part is below the earth, so from above the surface it looks like a dome. This shield can block one jutsu of forbidden rank, and 3 of S-ranks (240 Damage Points). And for that clones must continue to release their respective chakras in the dome. As user will be trapped inside that dome, so for attacking purpose he can make a single handseal, so that a appropriate size of hole/opening will be made in the dome and from which he can use his jutsu on his target and than again by making a single handseal, the hole/opening closes.
    Note: ~User must create atleast 3 shadow clones before using this jutsu.
    ~This technique lasts a maximum of 3 turns.
    ~If one clone is made to poofed away, than the ability of dome will be decreased and thus it can block one rank lesser techniques i.e. upto A-rank, and if two clones than upto B-rank. And if all three clones, than this technique ends right there.
    ~Opponent can't use the earth below the user, which is in sphere for any purpose. As that earth is separated from the main earth, due to lightning chakra from sphere, neither user can use the earth below him to slam his hands on the earth to manipulate the earth outside the sphere.
    ~Counts as 3 moves in the user's turn.
    ~ -30 damage to user due to excessive amount of chakra used.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ±± Declined, do not resubmit ±± Overpowered and fails the basic concept of being a forbidden rank jutsu. Your clones do the jutsu so you don't take physical damage. And stating "-30 damage for user due to excessive amount of chakra" is ridiculous since the clones are the ones doing the technique.
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    (Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus it will be destroyed after taking one S-rank technique. (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank)
    Note:~Can't use any jutsu of earth in next whole turn.
    ~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
    ~Can be used 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Approved~ Took out the part about needing to destroy 3 towers to stop the techniques.


    (Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus blocking any jutsu upto S-Rank (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank) and can take on one more attack.
    Note:~Can't use any earth jutsu of S-rank and above in same turn.

    ~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
    ~Can be used 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ±± Declined ±± I won't accept it with you putting "blocking any jutsu up to S-Rank except lightning". Its too general and leaves many holes. Either leave it how it is or specify what i can block with detail.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Quote Originally Posted by Dr. House View Post
    (Doton/Suiton:Hebi no hōkō) Earth and Water Release: Roar of a Lion
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: As the user forms 2 hand seals and slams his hand on the ground, a giant 8 by 10 meter wide lion head will erupt from the ground under the enemy. As the lion has erupted from the ground as its beginning to close its giant mouth on the enemy, water will erupt from the lion's mouth in order to entrap the enemy in water, then the lion will entrap the opponent in its mouth. As the enemy got entrapped within its mouth, the lion will smash itself into the ground, destroying itself and anything trapped within it. The water will entrap the enemy, and right after that, the lion will close its mouth. Despite the size of the lion, the lion will be able to reach into the skies, and the user may only use it within Mid-Long range.
    Notes:
    ~Can be used twice
    ~Can be taught by Dr. House
    ~higher then S-ranked earth can't be done in the same/next turn.
    ~Must master Earth
    ~Doujutsu may see it

    ~Declined~ Okay, two things: reaching into the skies? How far are you referring to? Then, you can't use two elements in one move unless you've undergone Yin Yang training. Did you?
    (Hebi no hōkō) Roar of a Lion
    Rank: S
    Type: Summon
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user bites his thumb, and forms a handseal then slams his hands on the ground, "The Lion of Foundation", a giant 8 by 10 meter wide lion head will erupt from the ground under the enemy. As the lion has erupted from the ground as its beginning to close its giant mouth on the enemy, water will erupt from the lion's mouth in order to entrap the enemy in water, then the lion will entrap the opponent in its mouth. As the enemy got entrapped within its mouth, the lion will smash itself into the ground, destroying itself and anything trapped within it. The water will entrap the enemy, and right after that, the lion will close its mouth. Despite the size of the lion, the lion will be able to reach up to 20-25 meters from the ground, and the user may only use it within Mid-Long range.
    Notes:
    ~Can be used twice
    ~Can be taught by Dr. House
    ~Unable to do any earth or water techs in the same turn.

    Note to checker: I changed the name and the type to a summoning justu. If the reaching still seems OP, then feel free to adjust it to a smaller scale.

    ±± Declined ±± I don't like the concept of using meters to establish range of a technique. Make it so that it can reach up to long range above the ground if that is what you want. Also, this isn't a summoning. If i understood correctly you are creating a lion of chakra that can "spit water from its mouth" or at best a Lion of water. Unless you have the Lion contract. If so, you need to submit this with a link to the contract and tons of rewording from the description. The "The Lion of Foundation", a giant 8 by 10 meter wide lion head will erupt from the ground under the enemy. " needs to be reworded. Its not a real lion is it? Soooo, its a lion of what? chakra, water, wind?

    (Jūho Chikarar No Ken) – Gentle Step Fist of Power
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: Similar to (Jūho Sōshiken) – Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists, the user forms two large lion-shaped shrouds of chakra around their hands, then thrusts them forwards at the opponent in a spinning motion to confuse and throw off the opponents aim before striking them. As the user has thrusted forward both of his fist (making a foward striking move) the shrouds or chakra will exponentially increase in size as its reaching into mid-range. As it has reached into mid-range, the two large shaped shrouds of chakra had expended as much as 4 by 5 meters each.
    ~Can be used 4x
    ~Can taught by Dr. House
    ~S-ranked or higher jyuuken won't be useable in the same turn.

    ±± Declined ±± I won't approve this as being a variation of the Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists. Also, this is more like chakra beams than gentle fist. This being said, chakra beams have been done before. Reword it and make this seem like a real Gentle Fist move.

    Re-submit:

    Quote Originally Posted by Dr. House View Post
    Custom style:

    (Chakurasutorīmu) Chakra Stream Techniques

    Description: This jutsu is basically the same concept as "Protection of the Eight Trigrams Sixty-Four Palms" as it is made up of the same ability, but it for example could take shape of a Lion, or even a wall made of constant excertion of chakra stream. From years of training, the user had came to master the flexibility of the arms and as the user is emiting a constant stream of chakra from his palm, the user is able to reach at any point around himself. As because of the user's hand movement is extremely fast (his movements becomes a blur), with extreme precise, the user will be able to create a figure like lion, or even a simple wall in a matter of seconds. The creation of techniques are extremely fast, and the technique itself may be extremely fast, as we can see how fast hinata is able to move with the technique, in order to accomplish her goals. The proof is starting at 1:17 as how fast is really the chakra lines, and how fast is the user is able to maneuver it.



    If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will tear him apart because of the movements of the chakra streams being extremely fast and accurate. The user will be able to control the size of the chakra beam, allowing her to create larger, arc-shaped chakra beams that may spread out across the user's entire attack range. The proof of how fast are the types of techniques in this style is how Hinata is able to create a huge barrier with just only one chakra line streaming from each hand. The chakra streams that these techniques are made up are extremely sharp, as taking the proof when Hinata is emiting the chakra streams when she's defending herself from the bees, as we notice how easily was he cutting the bees like a knife going through butter. The texture if you haven't seen a technique being made out of chakra streams it will look like that.



    ~Only may Hyuuga use this style.

    Note for checker: Basically the texture of the jutsu will look like this. As you see a barrier here, imagine this barrier to be shaped of a wall or a head of a lion, made of that texture.

    Note to checker: I literally changed everything, and made it into a custom style. I took your suggestion, and I won't make it into a taijutsu based style, but more what I had described within the description. I tried to make it as clear as possible that the jutsus that I'm planning to branch off from this can be both offensive, but it was meant for really to be defensive. Thank You Izuna for giving me the idea.

    -Declined. Way too OP. Invisible, cutting the opponent in half, tremendous speed. Good idea, but you made it way too powerful. And i would like to remind you that fighting styles should be submitted as modes and jutsus-
    Custom style:

    (Chakurasutorīmu) Chakra Stream Techniques

    Description: This jutsu is basically the same concept as "Protection of the Eight Trigrams Sixty-Four Palms" as it is made up of the same ability, but it for example could take shape of a Lion, or even a wall made of constant excertion of chakra stream. From years of training, the user had came to master the flexibility of the arms and as the user is emiting a constant stream of chakra from his palm, the user is able to reach at any point around himself. As because of the user's hand movement is extremely fast (his movements becomes a blur), with extreme precise, the user will be able to create a figure like lion, or even a simple wall in a matter of seconds. The creation of techniques are extremely fast, and the technique itself may be extremely fast, as we can see how fast hinata is able to move with the technique, in order to accomplish her goals. The proof is starting at 1:17 as how fast is really are the setting up of the chakra lines. The setting up of the jutsu can be done in matter of seconds, but actually getting to maneuver techniques which becomes figures into certain directions isn't as extreme fast, but as in a blink of an eye it will be capable of reaching on range.



    If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will create deep cuts into the user's body, because of the movements of the chakra streams being fast/dense, and it's properties of being sharp. The user will be able to control the size of the chakra beam, allowing her to create larger, arc-shaped chakra beams that may spread out across the user's entire attack range. The proof of how fast are the types of techniques in this style is how Hinata is able to create a huge barrier with just only one chakra line streaming from each hand. The chakra streams that these techniques are made up are extremely sharp, due to the extremely fast handling of the chakra lines, and the chakra lines itself is really sharp. The texture if you haven't seen a technique being made out of chakra streams it will look like that. In the picture, it looks like a simple barrier connected with chakra lines, but in the reality, it is because the user are channeling and handling the chakra line so fast, it looks like that to the naked eye. In reality, the jutsu in the picture is a fully covered barrier, enabling the user to cover even liquid or solid based jutsus. The jutsu is not invisible, only parts like how the barrier above is visible for the naked eye.



    ~Only may Hyuuga use this style.

    Note to the checker:
    ~I took out this part "If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will tear him apart because of the movements of the chakra streams being extremely fast and accurate." and I put "If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will create deep cuts into the user's body, because of the movements of the chakra streams being fast/dense, and it's properties of being sharp.
    ~I took out this part: "..as taking the proof when Hinata is emiting the chakra streams when she's defending herself from the bees, as we notice how easily was he cutting the bees like a knife going through butter." and I put " due to the extremely fast handling of the chakra lines, and the chakra lines itself is really sharp."
    ~ I added this to make it more clear to the reader, and to answer Rei's approval as she mentioned invisible: "In the picture, it looks like a simple barrier connected with chakra lines, but in the reality, it is because the user are channeling and handling the chakra line so fast, it looks like that to the naked eye. In reality, the jutsu in the picture is a fully covered barrier, enabling the user to cover even liquid or solid based jutsus. The jutsu is not invisible, only parts like how the barrier above is visible for the naked eye. "
    ~I removed this: "and how fast is the user is able to maneuver it." and I added this, as Rei had problems with its speed "The setting up of the jutsu can be done in matter of seconds, but actually getting to maneuver techniques which becomes figures into certain directions isn't as extreme fast, but as in a blink of an eye it will be capable of reaching on range."

    ±± Declined ±± Your hand leaves a beam behind...so the beam is shaped in the movement your hand just made. This leaves your concept of making intricate figures by that process invalid if you really think about it. Also, this is a variation of Gentle Fist but its still gentle fist. Thus, it should be submitted as a jutsu of Gentle Fist. A custom style is something completely new. This is Gentle Fist not a new style. Submit this as a jutsu but bare in mind that if its too much based on Hinata's technique it won't be approved.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal: Giant Ice Bears
    Scroll Owner: ~Exorcist~
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: Later
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A


    ±± Declined ±± The bear contract already exists and is held by Goro Kaguya
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Summoning Animal: Giant Ice Bears
    Scroll Owner: ~Exorcist~
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: Later
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
    Seeing how the bear contract is already made this is probably going to be declined.
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Suiton:Mizu Neko)-Water Release: Water Cat
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost:10
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: User creates a cat from water. The cat will start meowing, annoying the opponent and also distracting him from the fight.
    Note: Can be used only by This is my Username
    Note: Can be used only 3 times in a battle.

    ~Approved~ O_o
    Updating: I am changing the range O_o

    (Suiton:Mizu Neko)-Water Release: Water Cat
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost:10
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: User creates a cat from water. The cat will start meowing, annoying the opponent and also distracting him from the fight.
    Note: Can be used only by This is my Username
    Note: Can be used only 3 times in a battle.

    ±± Declined ±± When resubmitting you are required to bold the alterations you made to the technique
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Ninjutsu: Joubu Henka) - Solid Change
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User touches any solid and takes its properties and becomes like that solid.
    Note: -For eg. if user touches steel, then he will take steel properties and his body will become like steel.
    -User can come to normal be making a single handseal.
    -Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Unacceptable.

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    (Doton: Supi-di Mo-ta-baiku) - Earth Style: Speedy Bike
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short (when created)
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates a special bike made up of hard earth, which have 2 silencers each beside the tyre and 2 fans each at the end of silencer. This special bike start soaking user's chakra and passes it to the silencer and then to the fans, so that bike starts moving at high speed such that it can even be rided on the verticle walls, and user can control it anyhow.
    Note: -It is a normal bike in driving and controlling.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle and lasts untill destroyed.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.


    ~Declined~ Try to keep it within the boundaries of the Narutoverse. As far as I know, there's no motorcycle, and especially not the ones from Tron.

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    (Doton: Supi-di Kuruma) - Earth Style: Speedy Car
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short (when created)
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates a special convertible car made up of hard earth which have 2 silencers, and 2 fans each at the end of silencer. This special car start soaking user's chakra and passes it to the silencer and then to the fans, so that car starts moving at high speed, and user can control it anyhow.
    Note: -It is a normal car in driving and controlling.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle and lasts untill destroyed.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.


    ~Declined~ Same as above.
    Resubmitting, this is very similar to the existing one.
    (Shinra Banshō Dōka No Jutsu) - Assimilate All Creation Technique
    Rank: C
    Type:Supplementary/Defense
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:15
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:The user can take on the properties of any rock they touch and harden any part of there body.This jutsu also lets the target turn into fine grains of rock that can be used to do another jutsu.


    (Ninjutsu: Joubu Henka) - Solid Change
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Advance version of "Assimilate All Creation Technique" in which the user touches any solid and takes its properties and becomes like that solid. Although like the "Assimilate All Creation Technique" user can't turn into fine grains of rock.
    Note: -For eg. if user touches steel, then he will take steel properties and his body will become like steel.
    -Stays in that form for a maximum of 3 turns.
    -User can come to normal by making a single handseal.
    -Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by bansal.

    ________________
    Resubmitting, removed part about soaking and etc and also tron Bike..
    (Doton: Mo-ta-baiku) - Earth Style: Bike(Motorcycle)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short (when created)
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates a special bike made up of hard earth, which have 2 fan like silencers each beside the tyre, which help the bike to move. Bike moves at high speed such that it can even be rided on the verticle walls. Thickness of each tire is 20cm.
    Note: -It is a normal bike in driving and controlling.
    -Can sit a maximum of 2 persons on it.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle and lasts untill destroyed.
    -Can only be taught by bansal.

    resubmitting, removed the part about soaking and etc.
    (Doton: Kuruma) - Earth Style: Car
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short (when created)
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates a special convertible car made up of hard earth which can be rided at high speed. As it is a convertible car, so its top can be opened and closed anytime by making a single handseal.
    Note: -It is a normal car in driving and controlling.
    -Can sit a maximum of 5 perons in it.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle and lasts untill destroyed.
    -Can only be taught by banal.

    ±± All Declined do not resubmit ±± You are forbidden to resubmit techniques that have been Declined, Do Not Resubmit. You are hereby banned from the Custom Jutsu thread for 1 week (one full cycle). This account and your main account "Enzup" are banned from this thread from today until the 16th of February.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Submissions starting on the 01/23/2012 ending on the 01/29/2012
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Sogeki Geijutsu: Ransōtengai) - Sniper Arts: Cloak of the Heavens
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 50 (-10 chakra per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A (-40 to user)
    Description: Ransōtengai was created by Sellanes, he was Mathias' grand-father. Sellanes was the first and only bow master of his time. During the first great ninja war, Sellanes created the technique so that he could continue fighting and shooting arrows while having dislocated and immobilized limbs. This technique has been passed down from generation to generation between sniper prodigies. The technique involves pushing shape manipulation to its absolute limits. The user will gather up and release 50% of his chakra reserves. As the chakra is pouring out of his body, it will manifest a very bright blue angelic web-like cloak that coats the immobilized limbs and dislocated joints to forcefully move them. However, it does come with some drawbacks. The user will only be able to use Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, Sniper Arts, and Regular Ninjutsu while this technique is active. This technique does not enhance speed nor strength.

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Must have knowledge over Sniper Arts
    Note: The technique lasts for three turns
    Note: No Sniper Arts for two turns after the technique ends.
    Note: Due to forcefully pushing the bodies' limbs/joints to their limits and releasing so much chakra, the user will receive -40 damage at the start of the activation.
    Note: No ninjutsu of any kind including elemental ninjutsus for one turn after this technique ends.
    Note: 50% of the user's chakra is drained.
    Note: The user wont be able to run or walk for two turns due to exhaustion and chakra loss.
    Note: Can only be used by Mathias.

    I'd like to apologize for the first time I submitted this technique, as you mentioned it had no real drawbacks. And I also made it forbidden due to all the drawbacks, but you could change it back to S rank if you'd like. It really does not matter as I'm not gaining any damage or anything.

    ±± Declined ±± I still think the restrictions are a bit off. You don't need to make it forbidden however you do need to make it logical: if you can't run or walk what is the point and how can you use taijutsu or kenjutsu without actually walking? Think about what you actually want from this technique.
    Resubmitting:

    (Sogeki Geijutsu: Ransōtengai) - Sniper Arts: Cloak of the Heavens
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 chakra per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Ransōtengai was created by Sellanes, he was Mathias' grand-father. Sellanes was the first and only bow master of his time. During the first great ninja war, Sellanes created the technique so that he could continue fighting and shooting arrows while having dislocated and immobilized limbs. This technique has been passed down from generation to generation between sniper prodigies. The technique involves pushing shape manipulation to its absolute limits. The user will gather up and release a large amount of his chakra reserves. As the chakra is pouring out of his body, it will manifest a very bright blue angelic web-like cloak that coats the immobilized limbs and dislocated joints to forcefully move them. However, it does come with some drawbacks. The user will only be able to use Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, Sniper Arts, and Regular Ninjutsu while this technique is active. This technique does not enhance speed nor strength but does protect the body against minor impacts of basic weapons and low rank taijutsu (up to C-Rank).

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Must have knowledge over Sniper Arts
    Note: The technique lasts for three turns
    Note: No Sniper Arts for the rest of the battle after the technique ends.
    Note: No ninjutsu of any kind including elemental ninjutsus for one turn after this technique ends.
    Note: The user wont be able to run or walk for two turns due to exhaustion and chakra loss after the technique ends.
    Note: Can only be used by Mathias.

    ±± Approved ±± Well done

    (Suiton: Ryuutai Suteppu) - Water Style: Fluid Step
    Rank: A
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Ryuutai Suteppu is a very simple taijutsu technique with the enhancement of water. When being attacked in close range, the user will focus his chakra in the moisture of the air and materialize water beneath his feet. He will then use that water to slide back and forth in the ground as if he were standing on ice. However un-like ice, the user has complete control over his fluid movements. Can be used quite effectively to boost the randomness of movement when using Drunken Style. This technique will last for two turns, but the user will be restricted in only using regular ninjutsu, water, taijutsu, genjutsu, and kenjutsu, no other elemental affinities.

    Note: Can be used twice
    Note: Must have mastered Taijutsu
    Note: Must wait two turns to use again.
    Note: Must be taught by Mathias

    ±± Approved ±± Edited a bit as you had some useless restrictions and took the 3 tomoe thing.

    (Ame Sutairu: Ame Kumo Kadou) - Rain Style: Rain Cloud Vortex
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description After performing the Boar → Dog → Ram, the user will form rain clouds in the sky. Using the chakra that is spread throughout the clouds, the user will then bring down the rain clouds in the form of a vortex that surrounds the edges of the entire battlefield, leaving both the user and opponent inside of the vortex. Then the rain that comes from the clouds falls sideways, down, up, and near every direction. This technique is very similar to Vortex Storm Technique to bring down the rain clouds. The falling raindrops are closely linked to the users senses allowing him to sense any chakra source they come in contact with.

    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Must know Rain
    Note: No Rain techniques before using this technique
    Note: The clouds stay around the battlefield until they are blown away.
    Note: No Rain techniques for the rest of the battle after the Rain clouds are blown away
    Note: Can only be used by Mathias

    Edit: ±± Declined ±± I want you to add a note restricting the clouds from this technique so that they can't be used to perform Kirin or other techniques which require stormy weather or clouds. Other than that its fine

    Feel free to edit anything ^_^
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton: Tenkuu Setsuna Mizu no Jutsu) - Water Release: Air Instant Water Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Using his water mastery, The user will cause a very highly compressed jet of water from his legs, right leg or left leg at a time or both at the same time, this technique helps the user change his direction in the mid air using the high compression of the water that acts in a similar manner to when an explosion is released, as he user forms a small explosion into the compressed water jet giving him a forceful push into any direction by releasing the water jet in a certain angle without moving his legs, This can be used to push the user into the air or simply change his direction in the air, however the speed in which the user gains by this technique is traceable by the normal eye, This technique is formed without the usage of handseals.
    Note: Can only be used 5 times per battle.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Crow~

    ±± Declined ±± Similar technique already exists.

    (Suiton: Shindo No Unabara) - Water Release: Depth Of The Sea
    Type: Supplementary/Offense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points 80
    Description: Tobirama Senju using his water mastery will clap his hands together releasing a monstrous amount of his water chakra around his opponent, causing a humongous amount of water to be summoned from around the opponent reaching the size of the mountain smash technique but with water instead of earth, this technique slams onto the opponent from around him causing the opponent's balance to be disrupted and to be drowned by the huge amount of water that drowns the opponent as it turns into a large water source afterwards which spreads through the battlefield very quickly, although Tobirama's vision of the opponent will be disrupted, Tobirama places his hand onto the water releasing his water chakra throughout the water to know the opponent's exact location within the water, or if he left the water, this stance is similar to the tracking technique that's used by Tobirama and he must remain stationary when he is channeling his chakra throughout the water to track the opponent.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: Can be used as a large water source.
    Note: Can only be used by a Tobirama Senju biography.

    ±± Declined ±± Similar technique already exists as this is a mashup of various existing techniques.

    (Suiton: Mizu Reikyuu) - Water Release: Water Coffin
    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: One of the most devastating water techniques that's used only by true masters of the water release and requires great chakra control and shape manipulation skills, The user using water mastery he will clap his hands together releasing a large amount of water chakra around his opponent, in a burst of speed a large amount of water will be summoned out of the thin air around the opponent from 2 meters away from him in every direction, the water will start crushing on the opponent decreasing itself smaller and smaller in size as the opponent is trapped inside, causing a severe crushing force that crush the opponent's body in a similar manner to the sand coffin that's used by Gaara and has the exact same speed.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle
    Note: Works better if the opponent is underwater.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Crow~

    ±± Declined ±± similar technique exist and its severely overpowered.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Crimson Slash=クリムゾンスラッシュ
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 50
    Description: The user gathers lightning chakra around his blade. The user raises the blade and swings it down in any direction and screams Crimson Slash. The Slash creates a wall of Lighting Chakra that if it is to hit it burns/paralyzes the opponent

    ±± Declined ±± Similar technique already exists. Btw, we don't use the japanese name of the techniques in Kanji Form but in Rōmaji form.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Yondaime Kazekage
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Yondaime Kazekage is Sasori's second favorite puppet. He defeated him after a long a well fought batle. Yondaime Kazekage had the Jiton KG and used it to manipulate gold dust which he used to hold back Shukaku no Ichibi. The puppet also is able to release gold dust from its mouth, allowing it to use gold dust jutsu with that as a source. There is also a magnetic apparatus in its left chest compartment.
    Note: Only usable by Alphaqindyas
    Note: Battle in which Sasori defeated Yondaime Kazekage

    ±± Declined ±± I won't accept that fight as a fight for stealing a puppet.

    (Ashisogi Jizo)Leg-Cutting Jizo:
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short(mid-long when repeating jutsu)
    Chakra cost: 40(+20 when absobing)
    Damage: 80
    Description: This sword has a three pronged blade made out of gold. Its hilt is made out of stainless steel wrapped in purple bandages with the exception of six gold spikes stiking out on the sides(three on each side). There is the face of a baby at the bottom of the blade. Whats special about this blade is that it can absorb jutsu of the five basic elements. After absorbing the jutsu, the user can perform the same jutsu with a swing of the sword. The user can also send normal chakra into the sword and mist/smoke will come out of the babies eyes and mouth to blind the enemy. This mist can reach up to long range and is purple in color.
    ~NOTE: Can only absorb up to A-rank
    ~NOTE: Can only absorb two times per match
    ~NOTE: Can only use enemies jutsu two times per match
    ~NOTE: Can only use smoke/mist three times per match
    ~NOTE: Can only be used by Alphaqindyas

    ~Resubmitting the sword due to improper rank~

    ±± Declined ±± similar technique already exists
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    ( jikashu : ame )Magnet Release: Rain
    Rank: B
    Type: offense
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user utilizes whatever medium they prefer or have around them (metal shavings, rock, wood, etc) and generates senbon( 50 ) that hang in the air over the target. The senbon rain from the sky but are oppositely charged so if they rain onto the user, they are deflected by the difference in magnetic charges.
    - only be used once -

    ±± Declined ±± look at the bolded. also, the correct name is Jiton or Jishaku Ninpou

    ( jikashu: bunshin )magnet release : clone
    Rank: B
    Type: offense
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra cost: 20 ( -10 to reform )
    Damage points: 40
    Description:The user utilizes whatever medium they prefer or have around them (metal shavings, rock, wood, etc) and creates a clone that represents them perfectly. The clone can take 3 C-rank hits or one B-rank hit before it is destroyed.
    - can only make three clones -

    ±± Declined ±± Same problem, take out also the second bolded part, though the idea is quite good actually.

    ( jikashu benso )Magnet Release: Bullet
    Rank: C
    Type: offense
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra cost: 15 ( -10 to reform )
    Damage points: 30
    Description: The user utilizes whatever medium they prefer or have around them (metal shavings, rock, wood, etc) and generates a bullet or sphere of it. The object is then pushed at bullet release speeds into the opponent.

    ±± Declined ±± Same problem as the others. Rock, Wood and specially ETC aren't things you can manipulate with Jiton.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Shōtotsu (Collision)
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 20 - 30 - 40
    Damage: 40 - 60 - 80
    Description: The user wields two black swords, one 3 foot long sword and a 2 foot short sword. When separated, each sword operates at a B Rank Level Damage. The hilt of each sword is capable of interlocking at the pommel and becoming an A Ranked Damage Double Bladed Sword. User can then take the weapon one step further and send a massive amount of Chakra into the Double Bladed Sword, and turn it into an S Ranked (Damage)Chakra Bow with string made of pure, highly concentrated chakra that runs through the Fuller of the blade and out through the tips of each blade. The User can shoot pure highly concentrated chakra out of the bow of A Rank. The String of the Bow is durable enough to take 3 strikes from an S Ranked Weapon before it would break.
    Note: Going from Any Form to the Bow Form counts as One move in the user's turn to include shooting pure chakra.
    Note: Going from Bow to any other form does not count as a move.
    Note: Going from Two Swords to Double Bladed Sword does not count as a move.
    Note: Can only Shoot One Arrow per turn.


    The Hilt of one of the blades is made to go into the other. The user then turns it 360 degree so that they click and wont come apart unless the user clicks a button on the hilt.

    ±± Declined ±± A weapon has rank because of the techniques it has not because of the damage it can do as a weapon. The damage it can do as a weapon is determined by how you use it (Kenjutsu in case of swords for example...). A chakra bow already exists.

    Hyouton: Hakaishi (Ice Release: Black Ice - Demonic Ice Tombstone)
    Type: Defense
    Range: Short
    Rank: A
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 0
    Description: the user will cover his shadow with a coating of Black Ice. The user will then pretend to be falling backwards with his arms across his chest while channeling Ice chakra into his body and fall right onto his shadow and into it. The user can then stay there in the ice as his shadow, but cannot move or use jutsu while doing so. The user can come out of the shadow when he wishes, but will be laying on his back when he appears, almost looking as if he was rising from the darkness of his shadow. The user going into his Ice "shadow" is not unlike Ice Release: Demonic Ice Mirrors. The user is still aware of what is going on above. The user can also use this technique as a way of "Hiding like a mole" when standing on an ice/snow surface only
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle
    Note: Can only be used on a snow surface after having been snowing for 3 or more turns.

    ±± Declined ±± Once you merge with the ice there is no shadow...You were above making a shadow, you create black ice in the ground and then you fall into it...so basically you are inside a black spot in the ground visible to all... O_o To do what shows in the video it has nothing to do with what you describe

    (Watch from 1:35 to 1:41)



    Hyouton Kuro no Jutsu: (Ice Release: Greater Black Ice Technique
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: User creates Medium to large sized objects made of black ice for attacking or defense. Requires one handseal.
    Note: Specialty of Ice and Black Ice requires no handseals.

    ±± Declined ±± lol at the bolded. As if it would ever be approved. Btw, has black ice been submitted anywhere before? provide a link to it.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suna : Paipusumasshu) - Sand Style - Tube Smash
    Rank : A
    Type : Offensive/Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 35
    Damage points : 70
    Description : With the upward sway of either hand, the user is able to conjure up a tube made and filled of sand that rises around the target area. The sand is materialized on the ground around the enemy as the user sways his hand upwards. As the tube rises, it continues to grow towards the skies and sends the enemy up with it inside the sand tube. The fact that the sand within the tube keeps rising along with the tube enables it to bring the enemy alone. This will also cause a cramped, tight, squeezed space within the tube for the enemy. When it reaches about ten meters up within the sky, it curves around and heads straight back towards the ground at a great speed. Similar to Primary Lotus, the sand tube will let go of the enemy within it at about 3 meters tall. The enemy will then smash into the ground head-first.

    Note : Can only be used by a sand user
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : No sand techniques A-rank or above may be used in the same turn
    Note : Technique can be performed faster when target is on a sand source

    The Curving

    ±± Declined ±± chakra info is wrong. A-Rank = 30 chakra/60 damage. resubmit

    (Doton : Shi-so) - Earth Release : Seesaw
    Rank : A
    Type : Offensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 30
    Damage points : 60
    Description : With this technique, the user will first charge a massive amount of doton chakra within either foot and then stomp that particular foot onto the ground hard, channeling the doton chakra as he does that. The stomp causes it to burst into the ground, travelling underground towards the enemy. Upon reaching underneath the targeted area, the user will control that earth chakra to stop and release all its energy upwards to cause a square platform of earth big enough for the target to shoot up 10 meters into the air at an incredible speed, bringing along anybody who is standing on the platform of earth. Due to the tremendous speed that the enemy is going up, using techniques such as 'Wind Stream Technique' will be ineffective since the upwards motion would definitely be stronger than a tiny wind stream they are exhaling.

    Note : Can only be used four times per battle
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : It is not necessary to use on a person or enemy
    Note : No S-rank or above earth techniques can be used the same turn
    Note : Must be standing on the ground to be able to use this technique

    ±± Declined ±± Look at the bolded. Take that part out. Once in the air you have no way to control the movement of your enemy or affect it thus you can't limit it with this technique. Also the restriction i bolded is quite unecessary

    (Fuuton : Junshin) - Wind Release : Purity
    Rank : B
    Type : Defensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 25
    Damage points : N/A
    Description : The user performs the 'Snake' handseal and concentrates his wind chakra into a certain spot on the ground. With this, the air on the ground starts swirling and forms a flower. This flower has but a single petal stuck onto its head. This wind manifested flower scans the surrounding battlefield for gas that causes damage in the body (poison, acid, etc). When it has located a gaseous threat, it will immediately start sucking the air at great speed at the gas, sucking the gas all up. Due to the chakra within it, it is controlled only to be able to sense harmful-type of gases. Not wind-techniques or the enemy. The moment it starts sucking up the gas, that single petal falls onto the ground as a sign of impurity. After fully sucking up the gas, it explodes non-violently. That tiny explosion doesn't have the power to bruise a human and hence, is not used offensively.

    Note : Lasts until it has fulfill its purpose
    Note : Can only be seen clearly with a dojutsu

    Note : It is only able to sense harmful gases
    Note : The tiny explosion can't hurt anybody
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used four times per battle
    Note : Takes a few seconds to fully absorb most of the gas.
    Note : Even without a dojutsu, you can still see the swirling air and the shape

    ±± Declined ±± Awesome idea actually. However, note the parts i bolded. Take that out. Also, this is more an A-Rank or S-Rank and you need to make the flower a bit bigger.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Koe Chūdō | The Way of the Voice
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: The chosen technique +10
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Koe Chūdō is the ability to use sounds and words to regulate one’s own chakra, creating an effect similar to regular hand seals. By using the principles of hand seals and transferring them to words and sounds, Koe Chūdō enables the user to replace all hand seals with words and sounds. While regulating and controlling one’s chakra-flow with one’s voice box is indeed harder than using the standardized hand seals, the chakra spill is actually much smaller than one would believe. There are no specific words or sounds representing each seal, but each word must be at least one syllable long. Furthermore, there are simply some techniques that cannot be used with the voice alone without damaging the throat, due to the chakra concentration that occurs when an advanced technique is used.
    -Koe Chūdō can only be used to perform up to S-ranked techniques and only three S-ranked techniques may be successfully used with the usage of Koe Chūdō.
    -Koe Chūdō is not a technique in itself, but an ability. To use it, the user must post it in the beginning of the fight, or include it in his/her bio.
    -Can only be used by Zero Kelvin

    ~Declined do not resubmit~

    Fusenken | Sticky Fist
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30 (+10 every turn)
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Fusenken is a Taijutsu technique that allows the user to implement the sticky properties of chakra into his fighting style. As it has been proven in the Manga and Anime, it is possible to carry one’s own bodyweight vertically upwards, simply by focusing chakra into ones feet. Fusenken takes these sticky properties of chakra to a new level. By consciously focusing on making his chakra sticky, the user is able to create a glue-like effect anywhere on his body. Because of the conscious effort and extra chakra used on creating this sticky effect, it requires incredible strength to break free from these sticky points. The sticky chakra can be controlled at will, enabling the user to trap and free the targets limbs at will. Furthermore, by focusing this sticky chakra into his sweat, the user is able to create a sticky, transparent substance that can be stretched to short range and used to fool a target into believing that he has escaped.
    -Can only be used by Zero Kelvin

    ~Declined~ Not only do I find it completely over the top that you'd be able to use your sweat to such an extant, but the ability in general is misused. It's clearly stated in the description of the Tree Climbing Practice that if there's too much chakra, they won't be able to climb:

    "If it is too strong, the user will be pushed away from the tree, causing the bark of the tree to break around the point of contact and the user to fall."

    If there was such a thing as "using sticky chakra" they would never be repelled from the tree. The whole concept behind this exercise is vague and I'd only be ready to accept certain variants of the technique, this is not one of them.


    Enajīribāsu | Reverse Energy
    Rank: S
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: Enajīribāsu is an advanced Taijutsu technique that is used to defend against an attack and subsequently counter-attack. By using his many years of experience in Taijutsu alongside several breathing techniques and concentration exercises, the user will mirror an opponent’s Taijutsu-attack as it happens. As the two attacks collide, equally strong, the user utilizes his chakra and muscles to transfer the kinetic energy and power from the attacks into another limb. Already in motion as the two attacks collides, the combined force from the attacks colliding will strengthen the counter-attack with such an amount that it will be a mere blur to the opponent, even if he is a Taijutsu Master, and send him flying back with great force. The impact of the counter-attack will carry enough concussive force and chakra to cause a small pulse of power to explode from the limb as it connects with the target.
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Can only be used by Taijutsu Masters.
    -The user cannot use any S-ranked or above Taijutsu techniques for the following turn.
    -The force of the impact causes minor sprains in the limb used for the counter-attack.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin

    ~Declined~ Too similar to the abilities of the Sharingan.
    Enajīribāsu | Reverse Energy
    Rank: S
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: Enajīribāsu is an advanced Taijutsu technique that is used to defend against an attack and subsequently counter-attack. By using his many years of experience in Taijutsu alongside several breathing techniques and concentration exercises, the user will use a limb to defend against an attack, having gained slighly faster reaction-time from the excercises. As the two attacks collide, equally strong, the user utilizes his chakra and muscles to transfer the kinetic energy and power from the attacks into another limb. Already in motion as the two attacks collides, the combined force from the attacks colliding will strengthen the counter-attack with such an amount that it will be a mere blur to the opponent, even if he is a Taijutsu Master, and send him flying back with great force. The impact of the counter-attack will carry enough concussive force and chakra to cause a small pulse of power to explode from the limb as it connects with the target.
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Can only be used by Taijutsu Masters.
    -The user cannot use any S-ranked or above Taijutsu techniques for the following turn.
    -The force of the impact causes minor sprains in the limb used for the counter-attack.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin

    ±± Declined ±± Severly overpowered for a taijutsu move. You basically created an absolute counter regardless of what your enemy uses against you in his taijutsu move. I'll give you one more chance to make this approvable instead of simply shifting a few words around.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton:Mizu ōbushīrudo) - Water Orb Shield
    Type: Defense
    Rank:A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User creates a orb of water around him, protecting him from physical attacks and fire attacks for next 2 turns. the user can still use jutsus in the orb. Due to the orb is surronding the user, he is very weak and open to Lighting Attack
    - No A-rank or greater water tech for next
    - Can only use thrice in the battle.
    As shown in the figure below, fire attack(A-rank) will have no effect


    ±± Declined ±± similar technique already exists
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Bolt View Post
    About using 2 techs, this is a combo, and i've seen many cjs which uses 2 chakras in one cj, and you can take a look at the S-rank fire cannon techs, there is a tech named "wind and fire blast technique" which uses 2 techs but still only counts as one jutsu.

    (Tetsu Jin) - Iron Man
    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60(or XX) [-20 to user]
    Description: When falling from 20m of above height user focuses his wind chakra on his head part while facing downwards, and thus creating a cone of wind, so that he start falling with great speed by cutting the air. And then he makes his whole body just like steel by passing earth chakra, and then he crashes on his enemy, crushing his most of the bones and leaving 2m wide and 2m deep crater.
    Note: -Beacuse of such great speed, any tecnique used on him will give only 50% damage to him and user will continue his falling with same speed by cutting through it.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taugh by Bolt.

    ~Declined~ I know of that technique, and it was originally done by Kakuzu who could split his body into several monsters, what does it tell you on the technique ? Again, this technique will count as two moves. You need to precise that you first use the wind and then use the earth seperatly (hence you don't have the air cone on your head). If you've undergone Yin Yang training you can forget what I just said.
    That he uses 2 different chakras, i.e. fire and wind. Still that technique is counted as one move. Similarly i am using 2 chakras i.e. earth and wind. So my tech should also count as 1 move, b'coz its a combo of 2 chakras.
    Since i won't be having air cone if used first, so first i am making my body just like steel and than using air cone, so both will remain active at same time.

    (Tetsu Jin) - Iron Man
    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60(or XX) [-20 to user]
    Description: When falling from 20m of above height user makes his whole body stronger than steel by passing earth chakra and than focuses his wind chakra on his head part while facing downwards, and thus creating a cone of wind, so that he start falling with great speed by cutting the air, and taking the advantage of gravity. And then he crashes on his enemy, crushing his most of the bones and leaving 2m wide and 2m deep crater.
    Note: -Beacuse of such great speed, any tecnique used on him will give only 50% damage to him and user will continue his falling with same speed by cutting through it.
    -User's speed while falling will be that great that only 3T or above can track it.
    -The more the height, the more effect of gravity, so more speed and hence more damage.

    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taugh by Bolt.

    ±± Declined, do not resubmit ±± This one is unsalvageable. Sorry. oh and for further notes, this technique would be a Doton/Fuuton technique. Do not mock the CJ thread by submitting something called "The iron man" which is basically a mimic of a marvel caracter's movement. For that alone, according to the rules its a DNR. Do you have wind and earth training up to said rank?

    (Doton: Tobikomi Tetsujin) - Earth Style: Jumping Sage
    Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User starts jumping on the ground rapidly, sending his chakra in the ground everytime he touches the ground and cancelling any earth chakra of the opponent in the ground and than creating small earthquakes each time his feet touches the ground, after jumps. These regular earthquakes are that strong that they damages and unbalance the enemy to that extent that their opponent can't even perform handseals.
    Note: User can jump till the time he wishes to. But can't use any other technique while using this one.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: Can only be taught by Bolt.

    ±± Declined ±± similar technique exists
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-08-2012 at 06:52 PM.

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