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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Advanced Inuzuka Senses | Kōdona Inuzuka Kanchi
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: The whole field
    Chakra cost: 30 (+5 every round)
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This technique is an advanced form of the heightened Inuzuka senses, and it can only be performed by members of the Inuzuka clan whom have achieved full mastery of the clan techniques. This technique requires physical contact with the users ninken, and it’s based around the principle that Inuzuka clan members are able to mix and share their chakra with their ninken, and the other way around. The user focuses greatly on the bond he and his ninken shares and absorbs almost all its chakra, leaving it completely drained and unable to battle any further. The great presence of canine chakra in the users body, will greatly increase the users sense of smell and hearing to a level that is far more advanced than even the most experienced and talented Inuzuka clan members. This means that the user is able to hear the opponent’s heartbeat and smell the adrenaline coursing through his veins. Because of the massive animal presence in the users chakra network, the user inherits a small part of his ninkens “6th sense” (the sense that allows dogs to foresee storm, for example) which allows him to block out unnecessary sounds like explosions. The user is able to adjust his hearing and smell by controlling the chakra flow to his ears and nose.
    -Can only be used by a member of the Inuzuka clan.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Lasts until deactivated.
    -The users ninken cannot move or battle for the rest of the battle after this technique has been used.
    -No Inuzuka techniques can be used while this technique is active.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    ~Declined~ I'll give it to you, this technique is well thought out. Only a few thing to tweet. Why is there 20 damage if it's an A-rank technique? You can take it off. Make it last for a fixed number of turns (4). Lower your abilities a bit, check the bold part. Please mention that you can't use your dog (or any dog) for the rest of the fight as a drawback. Lastly, make it S-rank.

    Updating:


    Dai Chijin no Kanashimi | The Earth Gods Sorrow
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary/Offensive
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 60
    Damage points: N/A (120 for a direct hit)
    Description: The user releases a massive amount of earth chakra into the ground below him and claps his hands together; this causes a gigantic humanoid behemoth to rise from the ground somewhere short range around the user. The behemoth looks like a traditional samurai and it is equipped with a large katana and a big round shield. The behemoth and the user are linked by a chakra bond and therefore the behemoth mimics all the users movements to perfection, it cannot move by itself. The behemoth is made from the strongest minerals and metals in the earth, and it is able to regenerate most non-lethal damage by absorbing the earth around it. The users chakra is constantly coursing through the behemoth and therefore it cannot be used as a base for earth techniques. To function properly the behemoth draws on a small amount of the users life force. Because of the chakra and life force running through the behemoth, it is able to manipulate and fire great amounts of earth with the strength of an S-ranked technique, this counts as one of the three techniques that can be used every turn. Because of the massive chakra drain the user won’t be able to use advanced earth techniques for a while.
    -Can maximally last for 4 turns.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Causes -20 damage to the user.
    -No Ninjutsu or Genjutsu techniques can be used while this is in play.
    -No A-ranked or above earth techniques 2 turns after this technique ends.
    -Can only be taught be Zero Kelvin.

    ~Pending~ Are you updating the quoted technique to this? If yes, you need to bold the added/changed parts.
    Advanced Inuzuka Senses | Kōdona Inuzuka Kanchi
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: The whole field
    Chakra cost: 30 (+5 every round)
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This technique is an advanced form of the heightened Inuzuka senses, and it can only be performed by members of the Inuzuka clan whom have achieved full mastery of the clan techniques. This technique requires physical contact with the users ninken, and it’s based around the principle that Inuzuka clan members are able to mix and share their chakra with their ninken, and the other way around. The user focuses greatly on the bond he and his ninken shares and absorbs almost all its chakra, leaving it completely drained and unable to battle any further. The great presence of canine chakra in the users body, will greatly increase the users sense of smell and hearing to a level that is far more advanced than even the most experienced and talented Inuzuka clan members. This means that the user is, for example, able to hear the opponent’s heartbeat. Because of the massive animal presence in the users chakra network, the user inherits a small part of his ninkens “6th sense” (the sense that allows dogs to foresee storm, for example) which allows him to block out unnecessary sounds like explosions. The user is able to adjust his hearing and smell by controlling the chakra flow to his ears and nose.
    -Can only be used by a member of the Inuzuka clan.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Lasts for 4 turns.
    -The users ninken cannot move or battle for the rest of the battle after this technique has been used. Because of this, the user cannot use his ninken (or any ninken) for the rest of the battle.
    -No Inuzuka techniques can be used while this technique is active.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    I don't know if i'm missing something, but i don't see 20 damage anywhere on this technique. Please bold it so i can fix it. The damage is set to N/A on this technique.

    ~Approved~

    Quote Originally Posted by Zero Kelvin View Post
    Earth release: Burial of sorrow= Doton: Kanashimi no maisō
    Type: Offensive/supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 50
    Description: the user focuses earth chakra into his/her hands, and then slams them unto the ground, this creates a small earth wave, that’ll race against the target. When the wave is close to the opponent, (around short range) it builds up, (like when a wave comes close to shore) and becomes a 5 meter tall wave, which on the front side, looks like a crying face, with an open mouth. Inside the mouth there is a tongue, made of hard earth, that’ll try to grab the target, and pull it into the mouth. Inside the mouth there’s a lot of teeth made of stone, when the target is caught inside the mouth, the wave will sink into the earth and compress itself, crushing the target within it.

    Notes:
    • Can only be used three times per battle.
    • Can only be taught by ZeroGarra

    ~ Approved. ~
    Doton: Dai Chijin no Kanashimi | Earth Release: The Earth Gods Sorrow
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary/Offensive
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 60
    Damage points: N/A (120 for a direct hit)
    Description: The user releases a massive amount of earth chakra into the ground below him and claps his hands together; this causes a gigantic humanoid behemoth to rise from the ground somewhere short range around the user. The behemoth looks like a traditional samurai and it is equipped with a large katana and a big round shield. The behemoth and the user are linked by a chakra bond and therefore the behemoth mimics all the users movements to perfection, it cannot move by itself. The behemoth is made from the strongest minerals and metals in the earth, and it is able to regenerate most non-lethal damage by absorbing the earth around it. The users chakra is constantly coursing through the behemoth and therefore it cannot be used as a base for earth techniques. To function properly the behemoth draws on a small amount of the users life force. Because of the chakra and life force running through the behemoth, it is able to manipulate and fire great amounts of earth with the strength of an S-ranked technique, this counts as one of the three techniques that can be used every turn. Because of the massive chakra drain the user won’t be able to use advanced earth techniques for a while.
    -Can maximally last for 4 turns.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Causes -20 damage to the user.
    -No Ninjutsu or Genjutsu techniques can be used while this is in play.
    -No A-ranked or above earth techniques 2 turns after this technique ends.
    -Can only be taught be Zero Kelvin.


    Changes bolded (but really, it's almost like a new technique. But instead of dropping the old and thereby disabling people whom i have allowed to use the old from using anything, i'm updating it into this.)

    ~Declined~ Follow proper template for Forbidden technique. Take out the part where he can manipulate the earth. Where are the physical restrictions related to any forbidden technique? All I see if that you won't be able to use a few jutsu in the coming turns, but no real physical drawback. Lots of work to do on this one.

    Quote Originally Posted by Zero Kelvin View Post
    Water release: Tears of Sorrows = Suiton: No namida wa, kanashimi
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Self/Short
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: 40
    Description: the user focuses water chakra in his/her hands, then the user places the hands in front of his/her face, like if he/she was crying. The user will emit a lot of water, from their mouth and water chakra that just appears to be tears from their eyes. The water will begin to take form, and will quickly grow, into a three meter tall, faceless, human looking, clump of water, with very big arms. The water will place it’s arms in front of the user, thereby shielding the user from harm. This is all done in one fluid motion.
    Notes:
    • Can only be taught by ZeroGarra.
    • Can only be used three times per battle.
    • This jutsu lasts for 1 turn.

    ~ Approved ~
    Suiton: Naiagara no Mizu | Water Release: The Waters of Niagara
    Rank: A
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary/Offensive
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user claps his hands together while releasing a large amount of water chakra into the area around him; this causes a great body of water to materialize out of nowhere. The turn the water is summoned, it is under the complete control of the user because of the chakra bond shared by the user and the technique. The water materializes in three large waves that appear in a very quick succession right after each other.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -This is an advanced version of: (Suiton: Suishouha) - Water Style: Water Shock wave.
    -Can only be used by Zero Kelvin.


    Changes bolded :3

    ~Declined~ No "complete control" over the water. Either make it officially do something, like rushing toward the opponent, or leave it there to fill the field with water. Make it clear that the water materialize around you and is then directed or used (like the original water shock wave). I will not accept it if it's created near your opponent.

    New submission:

    Fuuinjutsu: Yoginaku Yōso Fū | Sealing technique: Forced Element Seal
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: The whole field
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user focuses chakra into his palms; this will cause the kanji for Seal to appear on the users left palm, and the kanji for Element to appear on the users right palm. This technique was created for the few situations where an enemy technique somehow prevents the usage of one or more elements. By clapping his hands together, the user seals the factors that prevents an element from being utilized, this works in the opponents favor too. The seal functions by sucking all the chakra out of the technique that prevents the element(s) from being utilized.
    -The user cannot use any Fuuinjutsu the turn after this is used.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.
    -Yes, this is a counter to the techniques I’ve seen that seals elements off for both combatants, I honestly think its utter running the RP, so here goes nothing.
    -Cannot be used to escape the disadvantages of the users own techniques.

    ~Declined~ I really don't get how you perform this technique. You simply clap your hand and boom, your opponent's technique is over? Don't contact me over VMs/PMs, just resubmit with a clearer description.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-23-2011 at 03:32 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Resubmitting:-

    (Suiton: Kieikiri no Jutsu) - Water Release: Spirited Mist Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user first uses the snake hand seal and then Gathering chakra in his mouth, the user will spray a thick mist that is concentrated in a small area giving it more volumne of water in a single area instead of spreading over a vaster area outward that will cover the area. This technique isnt performed like the Hidden mist technique in that it comes from a single direction being released from the user but has the potential if unchallanged to spread out over a area to become more like the hidden mist technique The mist is laced with Water-natured chakra, allowing it to soak up most Fire-natured attacks. It has shown to be vulnerable to Lightning-natured attacks, turning the entire area where it engulfs into a natural conductor. This technique can be used in conjunction with the Fire Release: Vibrant Show of Flame Technique to create a scolding wave of water that scorches the area due to their being enough concentration of water to cause a boiling effect.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per match
    Added how it works and that it doesnt spread around the target but rather point of origin being the user

    (Doton: Tsuka no Tsuchi Souzou Jutsu) - Earth Release: Earth Mound Creation Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The earth is caused to rise up at least 10 feet and a steep sloped mound is made with the shinobi performing this jutsu at its peak. The mound soaks up water like a sponge making this an effective jutsu to perform when fighting any water using shinobi. The use of this technique is to counter a water elemental jutsu, but it is capable of only absorbing a single jutsu in its useage and the user cannot use it to absorb any further water elemental ninjutsu.
    Note: Can only absorb one technique per useage of the technique and can only be used 3 times with two turns before being used again.

    -----
    New Submittion:

    Summoning Animal: Red Panda


    Scroll Owner: Iwabi
    Other Users who have signed contract: Zane Uchiha
    Summoning Boss if existing:
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:

    (Kuchiyose: Thor) - Summoning: Thor
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Thor is the King of the Red Panda. He is as tall as Ponta and he bears a large double headed war hammer that has been crafted from chakra metal which enables Thor to channel his elemental natures into the weapon for added power and he carries it on his back. He has an affinity for Lightning Element and Earth Element and can use the techniques up to what the user know's. He is capable of slamming his hammer onto the ground to activate the earth elemental techniques. He is capable of using the Killing Intent ninjutsu by simply inducing it by a roar. He is also the largest Red Panda summoning and due to his size he can travel across terrain quite quickly. He has thick fur that prevents him from being harmed by C rank and below Ice ninjutsu. He also has good hearing and a kean sense of smell allowing him to find hidden targets even when his field of vision is blocked.
    Note: Can only be used 2 times per match
    Note: Can only remain on the field for 5 turns

    (Kuchiyose: Tapian) - Summoning: Tapian
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A (+10 to regular taijutsu and Kenjutsu Techniques)
    Description: The user will summon Tapian a red panda the size of Gamakichi. Hes not particulary large compared to the Boss summoning Thor but he is exceptionally fast and strong. He uses Fire elemental techniques up to the users rank, but he is more a taijutsu and kenjutsu user and can use the techniques that the user knows and due to his great physical strength he can increase the attacks by +10 damage. Due to being a expect sword user he is capable of performing the silent killing technique with his sword which is a Odachi. Along with his natural gifts of hearing and smell which allows him to listen for the movement of the enemy and smell them out which aides in the silent killing technique useage when unable to see the target.
    Note: Can only be summoned twice and must wait two turns before re-summoning.
    Note: Can only remain on the field for 5 turns.


    ~All Declined~ Unrealistic

    Resubmitting:-

    Summoning Animal: Red Panda


    Scroll Owner: Iwabi
    Other Users who have signed contract: Zane Uchiha
    Summoning Boss if existing:
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:

    Note: Red Panda isnt actually classified as a bear though its been put into racoon and bear family it is actually in a family of its own being the Ailuridae
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Red_panda


    (Kuchiyose: Thor) - Summoning: Thor
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Thor is the King of the Red Panda. He is as tall as Ponta and he bears a large double headed war hammer that has been crafted from chakra metal which enables Thor to channel his elemental natures into the weapon for added power and he carries it on his back. he wields the hammer with his exceptionally large tail. He has an affinity for Lightning Element and Earth Element and can use the techniques up to what the user know's. He is capable of slamming his hammer onto the ground to activate the earth elemental techniques. He is capable of using the Killing Intent ninjutsu by simply inducing it by a roar. He is also the largest Red Panda summoning and due to his size he can travel across terrain quite quickly. He has thick fur that prevents him from being harmed by C rank and below Ice ninjutsu. He also has good hearing and a kean sense of smell allowing him to find hidden targets even when his field of vision is blocked.
    Note: Can only be used 2 times per match
    Note: Can only remain on the field for 4 turns

    (Kuchiyose: Tapian) - Summoning: Tapian
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A (+10 to regular taijutsu and Kenjutsu Techniques)
    Description: The user will summon Tapian a red panda the size of Gamakichi. Hes not particulary large compared to the Boss summoning Thor but he is exceptionally fast and strong. He uses Fire elemental techniques up to the users rank, but he is more a taijutsu and kenjutsu user and can use the techniques that the user knows and due to his great physical strength he can increase the attacks by +10 damage. He wields his katana with his tail or bearing it in his mouth. Due to being a expect sword user he is capable of performing the silent killing technique with his sword which is a Odachi. Along with his natural gifts of hearing and smell which allows him to listen for the movement of the enemy and smell them out which aides in the silent killing technique useage when unable to see the target.
    Note: Can only be summoned twice and must wait two turns before re-summoning.
    Note: Can only remain on the field for 5 turns.


    ~All pending~ Get the approval from the Panda/Bear contract owner for this one. Resubmit when you do get it.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:19 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Igneel View Post
    ~This is my last submission for the week~

    Kuchiyose:Katon Makai Seken|Summoning:Fire Style Hell World|

    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Long
    Type:Supplementary/Attack
    Chakra:80
    Damage:150
    Description:The user quickly summons Hell to battle field(as shown in pic).The entire ground will become super hot such that even water in nearby areas would evaporate leaving a barren land.The hell world is so hot and the fire jutsu's performed by the user will get +20 points boost and all suiton jutsu's used in the battle field will get -10 points.The air around the battle field is so hot that if anybody stays in the hell world for more than 3 turns including the user w/o any protection would melt (but the user can use Fire skin CJ to reduce the damage or similar jutsu's) .Water summoned on the battle field of (A-rank) would evaporate in 1 turn.User can make fire shoot from the ground anywhere in the hellworld thereby burning the opponent.Shooting of fire from ground considered as one of the users turns*

    • Can only be used once per battle
    • Lasts for 3 Turns
    • Cannot use any Fire jutsu at all after the the hell world disappears
    • Cannot use any suiton jutsu of S-rank and above as long as the hell world is in battle field
    • After the jutsu disappears the users speed decreases by 1lvl and the users reflexes also get lowered.
    • Shooting of fire from the ground counts as one of the turns.
    • User should have mastered Fire completely
    • user must be atleast Sannin Rank
    • Can only be taught by igneel


    feel free to edit whats needed for the jutsu's approval

    ~Declined~ Two reasons why I didn't bother reading; the template is wrong. Forbidden techniques don't deal 150 damage. Secondly, if this is a re-submission, where are the changes? Bold the added/changed parts.
    ~This weeks submissions~


    Kuchiyose:Katon Makai Seken|Summoning:Fire Style Hell World|

    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Long
    Type:Supplementary/Attack
    Chakra:50(+10 per turn as long as the hell world is in the battle field)
    Damage:100
    Description:The user quickly summons Hell to battle field(as shown in pic).The entire ground will become super hot such that even water in nearby areas would evaporate leaving a barren land.The hell world is so hot and the fire jutsu's performed by the user will get +20 points boost and all suiton jutsu's used in the battle field will get -10 points.The air around the battle field is so hot that if anybody stays in the hell world for more than 3 turns including the user w/o any protection would melt (but the user can use Fire skin CJ to reduce the damage or similar jutsu's) .Water summoned on the battle field of (A-rank) would evaporate in 1 turn.User can make fire shoot from the ground anywhere in the hellworld thereby burning the opponent.Shooting of fire from ground considered as one of the users move in a turn*

    • Can only be used once per battle
    • Lasts for 3 Turns
    • Cannot use any Fire jutsu at all after the the hell world disappears
    • Cannot use any suiton jutsu of S-rank and above as long as the hell world is in battle field
    • After the jutsu disappears the users speed decreases by 1lvl and the users reflexes also get lowered.
    • Shooting of fire from the ground counts towards one of the 3 move per turn
    • User should have mastered Fire completely
    • user must be atleast Sannin Rank
    • Can only be taught by igneel


    feel free to edit whats needed for the jutsu's approval

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Unacceptable.

    Fuuton:Kaze suihou Kakujuu|Wind Release:Wind bubble Expansion
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short-Mid
    Rank:forbidden
    Chakra:50
    Damage:100
    Description:The user sends fuuton chakra into the air on any of the previous turns(must mention) and in any other turns after that when the opponent opens his mouth to perform a jutsu or talk,the user does a single handseal and the fuuton chakra channeled into the air around the opponent will rush in making a bubble of wind(the opponent is unaware of this when the ball forms and the wind ball forms instantly as the user does the handseal coz the opponent might have already inhaled the air that the user fused his chakra with).And right after the air bubble is formed(this air bubble doesn't restrict the opponent's mouth to spew out jutsu's(not yet) and so right after forming the air bubble,in the next turn the user does two handseals making the air bubble expand instantly blowing up the opponents head.
    Note:
    • can only be used once per battle
    • must have wind element mastery
    • must channel fuuton chakra into the air on one of the previous turns
    • user cannot use any fuuton jutsu after making the wind ball and till the wind ball explodes
    • after using the jutsu the user can only use A-rank and below fuuton jutsu's
    • can only be used by igneel
    • jutsu is a 3 staged one and so right after forming the air bubble,by the next turn the user should do the 2 handseals to expand the bubble or the bubble pops in the opponents mouth dealing no damage what so ever


    Feel free to add restrictions in any of the jutsu's if needed

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Don't re-submit such ridiculously OP customs.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:23 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Fuuton-Kaze fantomu jōtai) Wind Phantom State.
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/Defence/Stealth.
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: after the 5 required handsigns, the user can transform parts or all of his/her body into the wind and appears as a shimmer when caught by the light. In this state the user can freely move in the wind at high-speeds and can only be hit by katon jutsu B rank and above. In this state the user can attack by sharpening the wind parts of his body and using it as a type of sword or harden the limb and use it as a hammer of sorts. Whilst in this state the user cannot use any jutsu other than an maximum of C rank in Fuuton style.
    Note: can only use this jutsu Three time per battle.
    Note: clones cannot use this jutsu
    Note: only lasts 3 turns
    Note: the user can not use and jutsu for the next turn

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Similar technique exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Raiton: Sandan (Lightning Release: Scatter Shot)
    Rank: S
    Type: Offense
    Range: Long- Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Cost: 80
    Description: The user firsts channels Raiton to his finger tip and moves in hand horizontally in front of him, creating a horizontal line of Raiton in front of him. On the user's command, the horizontal line shatters into thousands of tiny blades of Raiton that is launched forward at high speeds, shredding the opponent's skin apart.
    ~Can only be thought by Rikerslade~
    ~Only usable twice per battle~

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Custom Summoning Contract
    Summoning Animal: Basilisk
    Scroll Owner: BluePhenix
    Other Users who have signed contract: No one yet
    Summoning Boss if existing: Awaiting approval before submitting
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Awaiting approval before submitting

    The basilisks are related to the lizard species. They are omnivorous and eat fruits and plants as well as small creatures such as insects, fishes, birds and snakes. The basilisks are very fast runners and this enables them to possess the remarkable ability to "walk" on water. They are also excellent swimmers and climbers, can stay underwater for up to 30 minutes, burrow into sand, and their outstanding camouflage allows them to remain undetected when they remain still.

    In the Narutoverse, all the abilities of the basilisks are enhanced and also, their natural ability to "walk" on water is partly due to their excellent chakra control. They are able to speak human language and have their own kingdom.



    ~Declined~ Contract is already taken.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Custom Summoning Contract
    Summoning Animal: Basilisk
    Scroll Owner: BluePhenix
    Other Users who have signed contract: No one yet
    Summoning Boss if existing: Awaiting approval before submitting
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Awaiting approval before submitting

    The basilisks are related to the lizard species. They are omnivorous and eat fruits and plants as well as small creatures such as insects, fishes, birds and snakes. The basilisks are very fast runners and this enables them to possess the remarkable ability to "walk" on water. They are also excellent swimmers and climbers, can stay underwater for up to 30 minutes, burrow into sand, and their outstanding camouflage allows them to remain undetected when they remain still.

    In the Narutoverse, all the abilities of the basilisks are enhanced and also, their natural ability to "walk" on water is partly due to their excellent chakra control. They are able to speak human language and have their own kingdom.

    Gats has the basilisk summoning already.
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...8&postcount=18
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Sono San Handanryoku | The Three Judgements
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost : (20 per Ranton Strike)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: TSJ is made of high density Titanium alloy which is the reason why it's so firm and sharp.An old legend blacksmith by the name of Zoro made these blades while questing for the ultimate weapons.Rumors Say that the Legend blacksmith Zoro was a highly skilled Ninja who was blessed with the Ranton element.Upon he death he sealed his spirit inside of the swords giving each one of them a bit of his skill . When the user channels his chakra into TSJ a thin layer of Dark blue purple/blue coats the blade,it starts glowing in the elements corresponding color and allows the user to use its element effect. Each element has its own effect which, together with chakra infusion, counts as one of three moves per turn.


    Zaiki l Guilt

    Zaiki was infused with Zoro's regrets and sorrow, giving this blade the infinity of Water.Its recognized by the blue slash hanging of the Hilt.With this sword he is able to perform a slash of infused Water that can launch at the enemy and soak them while pushing them back. While using this sword the suer gains a boost of 5 to all suiton attacks and decreases the handseals needed by 1.


    Kutsuu l Pain

    Kutsuu was infused with Zoro's pain and suffering,Giving this blade the infinity of Lightning.Its recognized by the yellow slash hanging off the hilt.With this sword the user is able the channel his chakra into the Blade allowing lgihtning sparks to fly of, with this he can let of a small lightning zap that will destroy most things at short range.While using this the suer gains a +5 boost to Raiton and handseals are reduced by 1.



    Kirai l Hate

    Kirai is Zoros final sword, its infused with his hate for the world.With this he takes the power from the other two swords and infuses them together allowing him to create Ranton.The Sword covers the whole blade in an ominous dark purple/blue glow. This sword is razor sharp and can cut through most normal objects, but its real special ability is its power to create a bolt of lazer from it blade.This bolt is a singular version of the move Laser circus and can soar through A-rank rock and water although has a weakness to wind.While equipping Kirai the user gains a +10 boost to Ranton and handseals are reduced by 2



    Note: Effects can be used only three times per match
    Note:The user can only use one swords abiltiy at a time although can use all 3 Katanas as just normal swords.
    Note: Effects count as one of three moves per turn
    Note: User can’t use effect two consecutive turns
    Note: Ranton effect can only be sued twice epr battle and can be used for 2 turns after use
    Note: Impossible for others to use these swords
    Note: can only be sued by bio with Ranton
    Note: Can only be used by Daiki or people with expressed permission
    Note:After using the ranton attack the user cannot use another ranton attack on that turn



    Swords look like this::


    Edit were needed

    ~Declined~ All those swords with abilities are getting out of hand. From now on, I will only accept swords who have 1 elemental affinity, no more.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 09-24-2011 at 03:32 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    A message to all

    Recently, meself and the other mods have been getting VMs and PMs regarding many custom jutsu asking us to re-check them because you feel they were declined unfairly. I would like to re-iterate that the people checking the thread are all experienced Role Players who have had years of experience. All custom jutsu are reviewed and weighed equally, and we never decline a custom jutsu without a reason. We may choose to share this reason with you, but it is not manditory.

    I find it disrespectful to go and ask one mod to check a set of customs after another has already declined them. That's like asking your mom if you can go to the party after your dad already said "no". Please respect the Mod's verdict, alter your jutsu, and re-submit.

    This has been a public service announcement from your friendly neighboorhood Yamato
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Sogeki no Geijutsu: Dangan o Hikisaku)- Sniper Art: Tearing Bullet
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: An arrow infused with wind chakra that generates a wide vortex of slicing wind around it that pierces and repels any obstacles in its path like a drill. This technique can be combined with another elemental technique such as water or fire. The arrow may follow a strait or curved path.
    -Usable 3 times per battle and once per turn

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Sogeki no Geijutsu: Noizu no Dangan)- Sniper Art: Noise Bullet
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: An arrow that, with a handseal, bursts open and launches a dozen needles from it that all have wires attached to them bound to a central point and numerous exploding tags lining the wires. Another handseal detonates them and causes damage to everything in the area it spans.
    -Usable 4 times per battle

    ~Declined~ Do you realize how many abilities you're stacking up in this jutsu? It's an explosive arrow that lunch needles with bombs attached to the wire of the needles...Work on it.

    (Doton: Dosei no Hinan-sho)- Earth Release: Earthen Shelter
    Type: Defence/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: A protective bunker is created out of condensed rock and mud by forming a handseal and focusing chakra into the earth. It may be made with openings so those inside can see outside the bunker and attack while remaining protected.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -No other earth jutsu on the same turn

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Inago no Parēdo)- Locust Parade
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage: N/A
    Description: Any locusts the user has summoned rub their legs against another part of their body in harmony with others and produce a genjutsu-inducing sound. In the illusion, a large swarm of locusts fly around the targets that prevent them from seeing or hearing anything else. Locusts and the summoner are unnaffected.
    -Usable 3 times per battle
    -Lasts for 2 turns
    -Must have signed the locusts contract

    ~Approved~Made it up to mid-range

    (Fuuton: Harikēn'āmā) - Wind Release: Hurricane Armor
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30 (-10 each turn active)
    Damage points: N/A (+5 to wind jutsu)
    Description: The user covers himself with wind chakra that is white in color and spirals around every part of his body. The user becomes nearly weightless which greatly enhances the speed of his movements. Wind jutsu also get a slight boost in power. However due to being enveloped by wind chakra, fire techniques cause more damage.
    -Usable twice per battle
    -Lasts for 3 turns
    -No S-rank or higher wind jutsu next turn

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal: Condors
    Scroll Owner: Yarduatssss
    Other Users who have signed contract: HightimesHoward
    Summoning Boss if existing: Joutei Sendo
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Houka, Uindo, Suchi-Ru, Sou, Oizu, Elder Kyokan.

    Summoning: Young Condor Genny (Kuchiyose: Wakai Hagetaka Genny)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Genny is one of the lower Generation of condor. Elder Kyokan being from the oldest generation and Sendo being from the middle generation. Genny has little talent in anything but Genjutsu and Flying. She can use any Genjutsu the user knows as she has been taught by the contract holder and the signers. She can fly at speeds that rival Rock Lee's movement without weights and her talons are enough to tear human flesh. She is relatively small compared to other condors she can carry 1 person on her back when flying, however this doesn't restrict her flying speeds which can still rival Rock Lee without weights. She can be summoned and active for 5 turns but no summon can be done the next turn.
    *Can only be summoned for 5 turns*
    *Cannot be summoned with another condor*
    *Cannot summon another condor the following turn*
    *Speed while flying rivals Rock Lee without weights*
    *Can carry only 1 person on her back*
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Leaf View Post
    (...)

    (Genjutsu: Sasayaki) - Illusion Technique: Whispers
    Rank: A

    Type: Defence/Offence 

    Range: Short/Long

    Chakra Cost: 30 

    Damage Points: N/A

    Description: After the opponent is trapped in this Genjutsu, he will start to hear whispers around him, distracting him as he tries to find out who is talking and where it’s coming from. With every turn this Genjutsu is still active, the whispers will be louder, disturbing the opponent.
    - Note: The Genjutsu lasts until it’s broken or the fight ended, whichever comes first.
    - Note: Can only be used twice per battle
    - Note: Can only be taught by Leaf.

    ~Declined~ I like the idea, but you have to restrict the number of turns it last and explain how loud it would get near the end of it.

    (Doton: Sokonashi Pitto no Iwagakure) – Earth Release: Bottomless Pit of Iwagakure
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 65
    Description: The user performs two handseals (Ram → Rabbit) and stamps on the ground, creating big spikes that emerges with high speed from the ground before and on both sides of the opponent, forcing them to either jump backwards or upwards, while at the same time a huge pit is created behind the opponent without them knowing it. As the user jumps backwards he will fall into the bottomless pit.
    - Note: The user must have mastered Doton.
    - Note: The jutsu can only be used trice per battle.
    - Note: The jutsu can only be performed while the users feet touch earth.
    - Note: Can only be taught by Leaf.

    ~Declined~ Again, great idea but it just need some work. How big is the pit? Is it immediately behind the enemy? Make it reasonable (no 50m wide pit).
    Resubmitting, feel free to change things to make them approvable ^_^


    (Genjutsu: Sasayaki) - Illusion Technique: Whispers
    Rank: A

    Type: Defence/Offence 

    Range: Short/Long

    Chakra Cost: 30 

    Damage Points: N/A

    Description: After the opponent is trapped in this Genjutsu, he will start to hear whispers around him, distracting him as he tries to find out who is talking and where it’s coming from. With every turn this Genjutsu is still active, the whispers will be louder until it's as loud as screaming in the opponents ear, disturbing the opponent.
    - Note: The Genjutsu lasts until it’s broken, 3 turns or the fight ended, whichever comes first.
    - Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    - Note: Can only be taught by Leaf.

    ~Declined~ Make it Short-Mid range and explain how you cast the genjutsu.

    (Doton: Sokonashi Pitto no Iwagakure) – Earth Release: Bottomless Pit of Iwagakure
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 65
    Description: The user performs two handseals (Ram → Rabbit) and stamps on the ground, creating big spikes that emerge with high speed from the ground before and on both sides of the opponent, forcing them to either jump backwards or upwards, while at the same time a huge pit, 3 to 5 meters wide, 10 to 30 meters deep and steep enough to make sure the opponent can't climb out, is created directly (approximately 2 steps) behind the opponent without them knowing it. As the user jumps backwards he will fall into the 'bottomless' pit.
    - Note: The user must have mastered Doton.
    - Note: The jutsu can only be used trice per battle.
    - Note: The jutsu can only be performed while the users feet touch earth.
    - Note: Can only be taught by Leaf.

    ~Declined~ Change the description on this jutsu, you're making it sound as if it was unavoidable to jump in the pit. Someone could very well jump sideways or far behind and over the pit. Never assume you know what your opponent will do.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Air push
    Rank: D
    Type: Offense
    Range: super short
    Chakra Cost: 5
    Damage Points: 10
    Descriptions, Gather a small amount of chakra in your palm and go up towards your enemy and hit them sending them flying like 5 feet

    ~Declined~ Follow proper template with a Japanese name. Look at the first post of this thread. Also, this jutsu is a cannon technique, don't resubmit.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Johninto Uchiha~ View Post
    Since my ban is now over Resubmitting
    (Suiton: Mizu fenikkusu) - Water Style: Water Phoenix
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/Defence/Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: A technique that utilizes water to create a phoenix shaped made up of water. The user can then send the phoenix at the enemy or use it to defend against attacks.
    Note: Can only block ninja tools and up to A rank fire.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Note: Can only be used 4 times a battle.

    Genjutsu: Kyōfu no me(Illusion Technique: The Horror Eye)
    Rank: C
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:15
    Damage Points:30
    Description: A illusion used on the enemy to make them think a dragon is in front of them. Then the dragon will eat them in the illusion causing the enemy to feel numb.
    Note: Need 1T Sharingan and eye contact
    Note: Has nothing to do with the Dragon contract.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~

    (Suiton: Sen mizu fenikkusu no arashi) - Water Style: One Thousand Water Phoenix Storm
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 (+10 if shurikens are added)
    Description: A technique that utilizes water to create 1000 water phoenixes that is send to the enemy in different angles and directions. The phoenixes can have hidden shurikens added into all of them causing extra damage.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Note: Can only be used 3 times a battle.

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    (Doton: 1000-Nen tonbo no danmaku) - Earth Style: 1000 Dragonflies Barrage
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 (+10 if paper bombs added are added)
    Description: After the user does the require hand signs the user will focus their doton chakra into the ground. When user does this they will create 1000 earth dragonflies that will attack the opponent from varies directions and angles. If the user chooses they can add paper bombs to the dragonflies to do more damage.
    Note: Has to be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Note: Usable 2 times per battle

    (Kingurobusutāmōdo) King Lobster Mode
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A (+10 Ninjutsu, +10 Suiton Jutsus, +10 Taijutsu, +1 Speed Level)
    Description: The user will gather natural and suiton chakra from the surrounding and balance them out in their body. When the user has drawn enough natural and suiton chakra their skin starts turning into a lobster skin like feel around their entire body. The user then can use their suiton and natural chakra to create lobster claws out of water that can crush the enemy and trees. The user can also create extra legs made out of water so they can move to the side faster then they could already. Since they user turns into a lobster kind person they can breathe under water and swim faster.
    Note: Has to be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Note: Must have signed the Lobster Contract
    Note: After it wears off the user can only use C rank water, nin and tai jutsu for the next 3 turns.
    Note: No summonings while in this mode.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: Takes one turn to use this jutsu.
    Note: Cannot use any other types of elements, or genjutsu while in this mode.

    Feel free to edit.
    ~All Declined~
    Its been a week since I submit so I'm resubmitting some of these.

    (Suiton: Mizu fenikkusu) - Water Style: Water Phoenix
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/Defence/Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: A technique that utilizes water to create a phoenix shaped made up of water. The user can then send the phoenix at the enemy or use it to defend against attacks. The phoenix is as big as the hawk Sasuke summoned during the fight with Danzo.
    Note: Can only block ninja tools and up to B rank fire.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Note: Can only be used 3 times a battle.

    ~Approved~ check bold.

    (Suiton: Sen mizu fenikkusu no arashi) - Water Style: One Thousand Water Phoenix Storm
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: After the user does the require hand signs this technique that utilizes water to create 1000 water phoenixes that is send to the enemy in different angles and directions. The phoenixes are big as Itachi's crows when he uses Genjutsu.
    Note: Can only be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Note: Can only be used 2 times a battle.
    Note: Can't use A rank or higher water jutsus for the next turn.

    ~Declined~ OP. Make it 10 phoenixs max.

    (Doton: 1000-Nen tonbo no danmaku) - Earth Style: 1000 Dragonflies Barrage
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: After the user does the require hand signs the user will focus their doton chakra into the ground. When user does this they will create 1000 earth dragonflies that will attack the opponent from varies directions and angles. The dragonflies are the same size of normal dragonflies.
    Note: Has to be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Note: Usable 2 times per battle
    Note: No A rank or higher earth jutsu for the next turn.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Kingurobusutāmōdo) King Lobster Mode
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A (+10 Suiton Jutsus, +10 Taijutsu, +2 Speed)
    Description: The user will gather natural and suiton chakra from the surrounding and balance them out in their body. When the user has drawn enough natural and suiton chakra their skin starts turning into a lobster skin like feel around their entire body. The user then can use their suiton and natural chakra to create lobster claws out of water that can crush the enemy and trees. The user can also create extra legs made out of water so they can move to the side faster then they could already. Since they user turns into a lobster kind person they can breathe under water and swim faster. The enemy can user Lightning jutsus to shock the user since he would be using their Suiton chakra. The lobster armor can block jutsus C rank and under but the user will take extra damage from doton attacks. The user will have a blindspot which is behind them since lobsters have their eyes closer together.
    Note: Has to be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Note: Must have signed the Lobster Contract
    Note: After it wears off the user can only use C rank water, nin and tai jutsu for the next 3 turns.
    Note: No summonings while in this mode.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: Takes one turn to use this jutsu.
    Note: Cannot use any other types of elements, or genjutsu while in this mode.
    Note: This mode last for 4 turns.
    Note: The user takes +10 damage from doton attacks.

    Feel free to change anything to help get these approve.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ No human/hybrid mode will be approved.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    CUSTOM WEAPON
    (tsuwamono-shi-rudo) Warriors shield
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description- It is a shield of warrior and was wielded by a true shinobi and it's defense was said to be unbreakable it was found by gitanshu after many hard work and it was taken by him in his possesion this shield is capable enough of blocking all elemental jutsu up to B rank and is a mark of a true warrior, the user can pass his lightning chakra in the shield and can electrolyte the opponent if he attack head on or can electrolyte small living things like insect completely.
    ~need not be summoned if placed in a bio~
    ~can only be taught by gitanshu~
    ~can only block up to B rank~


    Looks like


    ~Declined~ How many B-rank can is block before breaking? Please mention that it can only block small B-rank projectile too.

    genkaku-mattaki Perfect Illusion
    Type: Supplementray
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:It,s one of the most basic form of genjutsu in which the users says to the opponent that Lets Have Some Fun and if opponent replies he will be taken under the genjutsu and will see the image of the user 7m ahead or below the user's orignal position depends upon the user when casting the jutsu it help user in attack and defense.
    ~lasts 4 turns~
    ~need to be taught by gitanshu~
    ~can be done 2 times~

    ~Declined~ This jutsu doesn't make sense. Re-word it or change it.

    (kagirinai-supin) Eternal Spin
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: While the user is in possesion of his sword he holds it with both of his hand and from one hand supplies fire type chakra and from another wind type chakra and then takes a 360 degree spins three times in a fracton of second and releases strong waves of fire and wind type chakra infused togother .

    ~need to be taught by gitanshu~
    ~can only be used 3 times~

    ~Declined~ Unless you underwent Yin Yang training, you can't use two different chakra at the same time.

    (pa-fekuto-shi-rudo) Perfect Shield
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:While the user is in possesion of his sword he holds it with one of his hand and tranfers pure chakra in it and rotates it in a circular motion and a shield of pure chakra is formed which is capable enough of blocking all the elemental jutsu upto A rank(shield is broken completely)
    and below (Shiel suffers a little damage but can take on one more attack)

    ~need to be taught by gitanshu~
    ~can only be used 4 times~

    ~Declined~ Add restrictions and make it 2 times per battle.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Oumu Jutsu: Supa Supa ) Parrot Arts: Pirate Cutlass
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user preform one one-handed handseal, and then extend his hand. From there, 2 parrots will fly at incredible speed, linked together by a thin extensible wire, visible with doujutsu. The parrots will swirl around a target, severing it multiple times before vanishing. They can sever all flesh, no matter the size and even bone, yet can only severe hard substancial techniques (Like Earth, Metal or Kaguya Bone) up to the rank of the technique.
    The parrots can severe several targets, yet they don't stay on the field for long. The pirates move at speeds that overthrow members and their summons of even Sannin rank, in mid-range, yet Kage only in short range, where the technique is pretty much point-blank.
    *Can only be used twice*


    ~Declined~ This is OP. A wire so small you can't see it yet it can cut almost anything? The rank here doesn't change anything. Steal is steal, whether or not it's used in a D-rank or S-rank technique. Work on that part and make sure you don't underestimate Kaguya bones too. Also, work on the bold part, I don't get what you mean there.
    (Oumu Jutsu: Supa Supa ) Parrot Arts: Pirate Cutlass
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user preform one one-handed handseal, and then extend his hand. From there, 2 parrots will fly at incredible speed, linked together by a thin extensible wire, visible with doujutsu. The parrots will swirl around a target, severing it multiple times before vanishing. They can sever all flesh, no matter the size and even bone, yet can't severe hard substancial techniques (Like Earth, Metal or Kaguya Bone).
    The parrots can severe several targets, yet they don't stay on the field for long. The parrots will reach the target before they're able to preform 3 hanseals handseals, for members and their summons of even Sannin rank, in mid-range, yet Kage only in short range, where the technique is pretty much point-blank. This means that if the handseal is seen, they will only be able to use jutsus that require less than 3 handseals on those conditions.
    *Can only be used twice*


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ This is simply unacceptable. You didn't work on the part I asked you to correct (the "only visible to doujutsu" part) and you added this OP bold part about being unavoidable to jutsu needing over 3 hand seals.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Houto Tame Keimei) Way to Dawn
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40 (if summoned)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Way to Dawn is the name of Riku's most highly favored sword. Riku constantly keeps it in his sheathe, having to often use it in battle, but if not already sheathed, he can call it to the field at any time (this requires no hand seals, so he can do it fluently and quickly in battle, but does require the above chakra amount). It's appearance is quite peculiar, most notably the wing on the inner part of it's blade. The main color of the blade is somewhere between a dark red and black, transitioning in colors from black to dark red from the blade edge to the blade's back respectively. One half of the blade's guard is compromised of what seems to be a demonic wing, whilst the other seems to be an angelic counterpart. Way to Dawn is of fair size for a blade, and Riku most often uses it with one hand, allowing for efficient and quick attacks. The blade's affinity, being that it's Riku's blade, belongs with ice-related techniques and jutsu. First, whenever the blade is in Riku's hand, he is capable of doing all ice jutsu with barely any handseals, but rather simply by swinging the blade or, in some cases such as the ice spike jutsu, stabbing it into the ground and three times per battle, the Riku can use this blade to increase any one of his ice-techniques ranks by one (obviously excluding forbidden-rank techniques). The sword can, at any time, be imbued with ice chakra that will increase it's durability and cutting power, though this, obviously, requires the user to use up more chakra. When the user does this, the blade will also become larger than normally and be covered in what seems to be a light blue coating, giving the sword extra reach, though still leaving it at the same weight and still allowing Riku to hold it the same way and still be balanced. The sword also has several other abilities (to be submitted as customs).
    Note: When focusing ice chakra into the sword, the user will lose ten chakra points per turn.
    Note: This blade can only be held by Riku. If anyone but Riku so much as touches its hilt, the blade will slowly encase them in ice while at the same time dropping their body's temperature exponentially. The ice will first begin to creep up their hands until it covers their entire body.

    ~Declined~ Check the bold part. Summon it with a special seal you need to touch, or with hand seals, but not out of thin air. Make it so it lowers your hand seals by 2-3 but change that part. Make it so it can only boost A-rank and lower by one rank.
    Changes made ^^. I took out the reducing hand seals part completely considering that most ice techniques use like one seal anyway, but I did leave in the part about being able to swipe the blade or stab it into the ground since nothing was said about that. If there is a problem with that, I won't mind that being taken out if it means that this weapon gets approved.

    (Houto Tame Keimei) Way to Dawn
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40 (if summoned)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Way to Dawn is the name of Riku's most highly favored sword. Riku constantly keeps it in his sheathe, having to often use it in battle, but if not already sheathed, he can call it to the field at any time with the use of a single hand seal that summons the blade to the user. It's appearance is quite peculiar, most notably the wing on the inner part of it's blade. The main color of the blade is somewhere between a dark red and black, transitioning in colors from black to dark red from the blade edge to the blade's back respectively. One half of the blade's guard is compromised of what seems to be a demonic wing, whilst the other seems to be an angelic counterpart. Way to Dawn is of fair size for a blade, and Riku most often uses it with one hand, allowing for efficient and quick attacks. The blade's affinity, being that it's Riku's blade, belongs with ice-related techniques and jutsu. First, whenever the blade is in Riku's hand he is capable of using certain techniques by swinging the blade or, in some cases such as the ice spike jutsu, stabbing it into the ground and three times per battle, Riku can use this blade to increase the power of any one of his ice-techniques of A-rank or lower by one rank. The sword can, at any time, be imbued with ice chakra that will increase it's durability and cutting power, though this, obviously, requires the user to use up more chakra. When the user does this, the blade will also become larger than normally and be covered in what seems to be a light blue coating, giving the sword extra reach, though still leaving it at the same weight and still allowing Riku to hold it the same way and still be balanced. The sword also has several other abilities (to be submitted as customs).
    Note: When focusing ice chakra into the sword, the user will lose ten chakra points per turn.
    Note: This blade can only be held by Riku. If anyone but Riku so much as touches its hilt, the blade will slowly encase them in ice while at the same time dropping their body's temperature exponentially. The ice will first begin to creep up their hands until it covers their entire body.

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Hyourinmaru – Ice Ring
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: A sword that has been passed down through Yuki clan for ages. It was broken before, in the war where the Yuki Clan almost became extinct. The sword is said to be made out of the heart of a special meteor that fell in the village. The meteor was as cold as ice, and had all the properties of ice. The Yuki Clan took the meteor, and forged a sword out of the core of this heavenly rock. As the sword was formed, it gleamed heavily and continued to send out a soft blue light. The user of this sword gets a +15 damage point boost on every Ice Release jutsu used, as well as slowly freezing anything it comes in contact with. Of course not the wielder, considering it must be one of the Yuki Clan to wield this. The sword also comes with a most secret technique. It gives the user the ability to use send out a wave of ice from the tip of the sword. This wave can be used as a direct attack or shield). It also has the ability to let the user use any ice-release attack without any hand seals.
    Note: The wave can only be used once (so the user has to choose for the offensive or defensive side)
    Note: When using the wave, it has the attack power of an A-rank attack, and can only defend up to A-rank attack, except fire.
    Note: The user can only use an ice attack without hand seals twice
    Note: The user can only use attacks without hand seals when having the sword in his hands.
    Note: Only one of the Yuki clan can wear this sword (especially Wesobi). If anyone else touches it, he/she gets frozen instantly.
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    ~Declined~ OP. Work on all those abilities...this sword is almost stronger than the 7SM. Take out the part about it reducing all hand seals to zero for ice jutsu. Work on it, you stacked many abilities that could have been hard to approved if it was the only this sword possessed.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Otoshi To) - Trapdoor
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates a circular portal through which he shoots his jutsu. That portal is also used in "Mud Fall" and "Dropping Lid" technique. Through that portal user can send only jutsus that have mass (meaning only earth and water). No living being can be sent through it.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ This can be considered time/space, which is against the rules.

    (Raiton No Jutsu) - Lightning Style Technique
    Rank: C
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Descripton: The user is able to make clearly visible objects by using their chakra to dense and move the lightning at great speed (if he creates a pillar one cannot stand on it like he could on earth). Jutsu can be used to create shapes like small sized pillars of lightning, tools, and shields of lightning (Just like earth style technique).

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist and by doing pillars and shield you'd actually be ripping off the cannon technique.

    (Taibu Raiton no Jutsu ) Greater Lightning Style Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: attack/defence
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user is able to make clearly visible objects by using their chakra to dense and move the lighting at great speed (if he creates a pillar one cannot stand on it like he could on earth). Jutsu can be used to create shapes like medium sized pillars of lightning, tools, and shields of lightning (Just like earth style technique with more chakra used in order to make objects bigger and stronger).

    ~Declined~ Same as above.

    (Katon No Jutsu) - Fire Style Technique
    Rank: C
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Descripton: The user is able to make clearly visible objects by using their chakra to dense and move the fire at great speed (if he creates a pillar one cannot stand on it like he could on earth). Jutsu can be used to create shapes like small sized pillars of fire, tools, and shields of fire (Just like earth style technique).

    (Taibu Katon no Jutsu ) Greater Fire Style Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: attack/defence
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user is able to make clearly visible objects by using their chakra to dense and move the fire at great speed (if he creates a pillar one cannot stand on it like he could on earth). Jutsu can be used to create shapes like medium sized pillars of fire, tools, and shields of fire (Just like earth style technique with more chakra used in order to make objects bigger and stronger).

    ~Both declined~ Same as above. Those are rip off of already existing cannon and custom techniques.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    ( Kuchyose| Ko Senpai Karasu ) Summoning| Great Elder Raven

    Rank: S
    Type: Summoning
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Range: Short - Long
    Description:
    The user will do the necessary handseals when the user finish that he/she will summon a second version of a Elder Raven this version is stronger since this Raven had live for a long time now, his age is unknown due to his thoughts of ages but people have said rumors that his about 67 year old. This great elder raven is able to use wind up to b-rank and fire up to a-rank but this raven is also, able to get to get contact of the opponent through the ground meaning that this Raven is able to find chakra of the opponent through the ground only, can be use four times on battle. The size of this elder is the size of Gamakichi.

    - Must have sign the Raven contract to use this jutsu.
    - This can only be summon once.
    - Can only last, on battles five turns
    - If the raven uses a a-rank fire technique the contact through the ground lower's and can only be use twice on battle.


    ~Declined~ Work on the bold part. Make it clearer.

    ( Kuchyose| Ko Kira Karasu ) Summoning| Great Killer Raven

    Rank: Forbidden
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: N/A (-25 to the user when summon)
    Range: Short - Long
    Type: Summoning
    Description:
    The user will summon Great Killer Raven which is the second, version of Killer Raven this raven is a female she's known as Great Killer Raven due too her slightly way to kill people this version is rarely summon on battle due to her power they have been rumors that she's amazingly strong on battle. This female Raven has yellow and blue feathers, her feathers represent the elements she's able to use meaning she could use water and lightning. Great Killer Raven is able to use water up to s-rank without water source she is really powerful when it come's to water, she don't need a water source for water due to her training she has study water since a little raven and she was train by it for about three years. She's able to use lightning up to a-rank since she was born on Kumogakure she had great training. In order for this female raven to do jutsus with hand seals the user that summon her to the battle field need's to be on the raven back and do the hand seals for the raven. The peak of this raven is able to transform into a sword call 'Feathers' this sword is rarely use by the Raven. Great Killer Raven is the size of Gamabunta.

    - The Great raven stay's on battlefield for five turns.
    - The sword call Feathers goes away the next, turn and it can't be use again.
    - Must sign the Rave contract.


    ~Declined~ No Forbidden-rank summoning. Work on the abilities and the description too.

    ( Kuchyose| Fukusuu Karasu ) Summoning| Multiple Ravens

    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Type: Summoning
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description:
    The user first, will do the necessary hand seals and summon three ravens on battlefield each, of this raven is able to do only one element. The first, raven name is 'Light' the second, raven name is 'Dark' and the third, raven name is 'Sunset' each of their name has a meaning. Light is able to do earth jutsus up to b-rank only, when his on the ground, Dark is able to do taijutsu and is able to fight only at close range and Dark stand's up like a normal humans and fight with his strong wings and Sunset is able to fly at high speed on the sky though these three ravens are a team but they are hardly summon on battle they mostly summon on war. Light has only white feathers, Black has only back feathers and Sunlight has only yellow feathers. The size of these three summoning is the size of the known Gamabunta.

    - These three summoning only last 3 turns on battlefield
    - If Light uses one b-rank earth jutsu he can't use a b-rank earth jutsu again
    - Must have sign the Ravens contract


    ~Declined~ Submit all of those individually and make them smaller. Only boss summon can be as big as Gamabunta.
    ( Kuchyose| Ko Senpai Karasu ) Summoning| Great Elder Raven

    Rank: S
    Type: Summoning
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Range: Short - Long
    Description:
    The user will do the necessary handseals when the user finish that he/she will summon a second version of a Elder Raven this version is stronger since this Raven had live for a long time now, his age is unknown due to his thoughts of ages but people have said rumors that his about 67 year old. This great elder raven is able to use wind up to b-rank and fire up to a-rank but this raven is also, able to get to get contact of with the opponent through the ground meaning that this Raven is able to find the opponent no matter where he is for example, if the opponent is underground the Raven is able to find him and tell he/she where he/she is. The size of this elder is the size of Gamakichi.

    - Must have sign the Raven contract to use this jutsu.
    - This can only be summon once.
    - Can only last, on battles five turns
    - If the raven uses a a-rank fire technique the contact through the ground lower's and can only be use twice on battle.


    ( Kuchyose| Karasu Gijutsu ) Summoning| Raven Art

    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Type: Summoning
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:
    The user first, will do the necessary hand seals and slam their hands on the ground which would summon a Raven known as 'Art'. This raven is an evil raven is has the personality of the known snake 'Manda' when this raven is summon to battle he get's really mad but at the same time he love's to fight and he get happy and start's to have fun. This raven feather are way different than normal ravens feather this raven feather are color Bazaar, this feathers are really rare and they have a meaning of being rare. This raven was born on Konohagakure and it has special abilities due to the feathers. This raven is able to do wind all the way up to s-rank and is also, able to trap people on his special genjutsu call 'Bazaar trap'. When Art release his genjutsu he first, has to put his wing up facing the opponent and by the second later, the opponent will be trap on the genjutsu on this genjutsu the opponent see a place where their was war and stuff alike such as his saddest moments on life for example, user one summon's Art to the battlefield as soon as Art is summon he use's his genjutsu and the opponent will get trap at it, when the opponent get's trap he will see many different wars and all his saddest moment on his whole life. While his trap on the genjutsu, the user is able to do what he wish to do with the opponent.

    - The genjutsu don't need eye sight from the opponent to be activate
    - The genjutsu is only usable twice per battle
    - Art only can last, five rounds
    - When Art use an s-rank wind element the Genjutsu limit lower's to only usable once per battle
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    ~Both declined~ When re-submitting a jutsu, but the added part in bold. Otherwise we won't check them.
     
         
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