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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Satetsu no Kiba / 砂鉄の牙) - Iron Sand Fang
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user creates a spiraling form of Iron Sand that moves similar to many Inuzuka jutsu. The Iron Sand takes the form of a spinning grayed object. The Fang can be used from any large Iron Sand construction. The fang can bust through A-Rank Doton defenses but fails when pitted against S-Rank defenses.
    Note:
    ~Usable twice.

    ~Declined~ since when does Iran sand is the elemental weakness of Earth? Fix your jutsu.

    (Satetsu: Tengoku no Kensetsu) Iron Sand: Heavenly Construction
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive / Supplementary / Defensive
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user quickly creates a construction out of their Iron Sand and builds the Iron Sand steadily up into the form of a large man. The user can choose to construct him in pieces with only his chest, arms, and head exposed and have that attack the target. The construction is about 12 feet high and 12 feet wide. If he is able to grab onto the opponent, he can use Iron Sand burial to crush them into a pulp. The man can be used as a medium for Iron Sand jutsu below S-Rank.
    Restrictions:
    ~You can create his arms, both, two times. Lasts 3 turns (Part of a whole body creation.)
    ~You can create his chest two times. Lasts 2 turns (Part of a whole body creation.)
    ~You can create his legs, both, two times. Lasts 3 turns (Part of the whole body creation.)
    ~When used to create his fully body, you can not use this jutsu again, for the remainder of the battle. Lasts 4 turns.
    ~His chest can be used to block B-Rank or lower jutsu, his fully body can be used to block A-Rank or lower.

    ~Declined~ Restrictions are way off. Lower the number of turns every limb can be on the field or make it last 4 turns for all but once per match (if you choose that option, make it 2 turns for the whole body). Are there any drawbacks? Fix that.

    (Jiton: Kyanonboru) - Magnetism Release: Cannonball
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user summons an iron ball that has been wrapped up in explosive tags and suspends it in mid-air. The user then uses their magnetism release to launch the cannonball at the target and with a handseal, the explosive tags explode.
    Restrictions:
    ~Usable once.

    ~Declined~ I have nothing against this jutsu and the restriction is fair, but I want to know; can you control the cannonball as it's being shot at your opponent? Make it clear in your next submission

    (Jiton/Katon Release: Taiyo no Oki-Sa) - Magnetism/Fire Release: Solar Magnitudes
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid-Long
    Type: Attack
    CHakra cost: 50
    Damage: 90
    Description: The user will concentrate magnetic waves above him, attracting any metal within mid range above his hands (this wouldn't take more than 5 seconds). After attracting the metal into one big ball, the user will infuse the metal ball with fire within temperatures of 1000 C. Before melted metal falls above the user, the user will swing both arms downward, liberating the giant ball with two hands. The ball will destroy anything within its path and after crashing will make a big crater, leaving nothing behind. The effects will be the same as a meterorite crashing on earth. If the user is within mid-range of the explosion, he will suffer -20 of damage
    -Not A-rank and above fire for the next two turns
    -This move counts as two of the three moves available
    -The user cannot use water jutsus the same turn and the next turn
    -No magnetism related techniques in the same turn or next turn
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Can only be used by magnetism users
    -Can only be taught by ~Xanthe~ and Gin-San

    ~Declined~ Twice per battle and no physical drawbacks whatsoever? Fix that and re-submit.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-12-2011 at 10:04 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal: crocodile (kurokodairu)
    Scroll Owner:Heavens Blade
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing:N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A

    ~Declined~ Contract already exist.

    (shottogan) shotgun
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: the user will create many mini balls of chakra in the palm of there hand then release them at extremely high velocity the shot will have a "V" spray pattern meaning the farther away you are the wider the spead of the balls making it harder to dodge
    -can only be used 2 times per match
    -Those balls can be blocked by A-rank elemental jutsu
    -no ninjutsu for the next 2 turns
    -can only be taught by Heavens Blade

    ~Approved~ added the bold part and made it 2 times per match. Be aware that raw chakra is almost always weaker then elemental chakra (for obvious reasons).

    (Doton: sakasa setsudanki) earth release: reverse guillotine
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: after preforming three handseals earth will form around your opponents legs (it swirls around there legs in a simular way as gaaras sand coffin tech) keeping him in place while a large guillotine comes up from the ground slicing them. this can also be done with a single handseal without the ground locking them in place
    -can only use twice per match
    -cant use another earth jutsu for this turn or your next 2 turns
    -can only be taught by heavens blade

    ~Declined~ Please elaborate on the guillotine. Where does it emerge from? Is it at an angle from behind/in front of the opponent or is it directly under the opponent?

    (Hyouton: yobigoe bouei)ice release: Hail Protection
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: after a single handseal the user creates a vortex around themselves which gathers all the nearby hail to protect the user as the vortex continues to gather more pieces of hail the hail begins to combine creating larger pieces of hail that can protect from larger attacks after 3 turns the hail is the size of a basketball (29cm) and is then shot out in every direction destroying everything it hits
    -must be hailing
    -only used by ice bios
    -hail can be shot early and if done the attack will take the rank of what it can defend against
    -if hail isnt launched by third turn the vortex stops
    -first turn it can handle up to B rank jutsu (strengths and weaknesses apply)
    -second turn it can handle up to A rank jutsu (strengths and weaknesses apply)
    -third turn can handle S rank jutsu (strengths and weaknesses apply)
    -user choses when during their turn to launch the hail
    -can only be used twice
    -user cant use any ice jutsu while this is in affect or for the the following turn
    -can only be taught by heavens blade

    ~Declined~ "destroying everything in it's part"? It's hail, we're not talking about Lava here. I know it'll cause physical damage to the opponent, but I just don't see hail cutting down trees and destroying hills and rock formation. Also, the bold part doesn't make sense. Restrict the number of turn the vortex can be kept active.

    (hebereke no parkour) drunken parkour
    Type: Supplementry/Mode
    Rank: S
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: this form of taijutsu is a offchute of drunken fist, drunken parkour combines the unpredictable movements of drunken fist with the environmental usage of parkour and alot of doton jutsu to manipulate the environment to the users advantage the biggest difference between drunken fist and drunken parkour is the use of chakra (both doton and normal) the user uses normal chakra to help with there agility and speed and uses doton chakra to help with strength and defence
    -while in this mode must take a drink of alchole every 4 turns this doesnt count as a move (could mess up time frame so its a negitive) unless you use another form to get in a drunken stat I.E genjutsu
    -can only use drunken parkour justu and B ranked doton jutsu that doesnt require handseals
    -as long as your drunk you can stay in this mode
    -can only be taught by Heavens Blade

    ~Declined do not resubmit~
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-13-2011 at 03:46 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by -Hatake- View Post
    ~Updating~

    Summoning Boss if existing: Kuchiyose: Inazuma Harpy Washi: Krillic (Summoning: Lightning Harpy Eagle: Krillic)



    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: N/A
    Chackra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Krillic reigns over the harpy eagle world and is the leader and ruler of all harpy eagles. and nearly the same size as Gamabunta. He has huge wings which enable him to fly swiftly through the air at fast speeds and can use his claws as a means of attack. He is a master at lightning allowing him to use lightning style justu's upto S-rank and is also skilled in defending against them and can block lightning based techniques upto A-rank.

    Note: This summoning can be used once and lasts for 4 turns.
    Note: He can only be destroyed by getting hit by 3 B-rank attacks (Excluding Lightning B-ranks.), 2 A-rank (Excluding Lightning A-rank attacks) and 1 S-rank.
    Note: Can only be summoned by someone with the Harpy eagle contract.
    Note: His lightning attack counts as one of the 3 turns.


    ~Declined~ Take out the bold part and restrict the amount of lightning attack it can use and block. Also, reduce the size, with just a swing of his wings he could blow back anyone on the field.

    Other Summoning animals tied to contract: Kuchiyose: Kaji Harpy Washi: Pyralis (Summoning: Fire Harpy Eagle: Pyralis)



    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: N/A
    Chackra cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Pyralis is one of the main Harpy eagles, second in command to Krillic, he is just a bit smaller than Krillic and has big wngs which allow him to fly gracefully in the air and also uses his claws as a mean of attack. He is an expert user of the fire element and can use fire based attacks upto A-rank and can also defend against fire based attacks up to A-rank.

    Note: Can be summoned once and lasts 5 turns.
    Note: Can only be summoned by people with the Harpy Eagle contract.
    Note: Can only be destroyed by taking a hit from 2 B-ranks (Excluding Fire type B-ranks), 1 A-rank (Excluding Fire type A-rank), or 1 S-rank.
    Note: His fire attacks counts as one of the 3 turns.


    May add more later.

    ~Declined~ Same as above, though I've put something else in bold; the A-rank restriction. Make it B-rank and restrict the number of times it can block such jutsus.


    Doton: Chikyuu Enchou (Doton: Earth Dome)


    Type: Defence
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: N/A
    Chackra cost: 50
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: By focusing the users earth chackra, the user gathers his earth chackra and keeps doing so and then covers himself with earth in a dome made from rock-hard thick earth material that is so thick (about 3 foot thick), and strong that it can block any technique up to S-rank. He can de-activate the dome anytime he wants. It takes up so much chackra because of the amount of chackra you are putting into the dome to make it so thick.

    Note: Can only be used 3 times in battle.
    Note: Can only be taught/used by -Hatake-.
    Note: The user cannot use any S-ranks the next turn because of the amount of chackra it drains.

    Edit if needed.



    ~Declined~ Fix the bold part. Never say such words as "instantaneous, immediately, any techniques..." in a jutsu description, it's almost always an auto-decline. Kirin is S-rank, do you believe your earth technique could block it?
    ~Updating/Fixing~

    Summoning Boss if existing: Kuchiyose: Inazuma Harpy Washi: Krillic (Summoning: Lightning Harpy Eagle: Krillic)



    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: N/A
    Chackra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Krillic reigns over the harpy eagle world and is the leader and ruler of all harpy eagles,and about a little over half the size of Gamabunta. He has huge wings which enable him to fly swiftly through the air at fast speeds and can use his claws as a means of attack. He is a master at lightning allowing him to use lightning style justu's upto S-rank and is also skilled in defending against them and can block lightning based techniques upto A-rank.

    Note: This summoning can be used once and lasts for 4 turns.
    Note: Can only be summoned by someone with the Harpy eagle contract.
    Note: His lightning attack counts as one of the 3 turns.
    Note: He can only use 3 lightning attacks while on the field.
    Note: He can only block lightning attacks 2 while on the field


    Taken out the part that you said to take out and changed the mistakes in bold.

    Other Summoning animals tied to contract: Kuchiyose: Kaji Harpy Washi: Pyralis (Summoning: Fire Harpy Eagle: Pyralis)



    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: N/A
    Chackra cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Pyralis is one of the main Harpy eagles, second in command to Krillic, he is just a bit smaller than Krillic and has big wings which allow him to fly gracefully in the air and also uses his claws as a mean of attack. He is an expert user of the fire element and can use fire based attacks upto A-rank and can also defend against fire based attacks up to B-rank.

    Note: Can be summoned once and lasts 5 turns.
    Note: Can only be summoned by people with the Harpy Eagle contract.
    Note: His fire attacks counts as one of the 3 turns.
    Note: He can only use fire attacks 2 times.
    Note: Can only block fire attacks 2 times.


    Changed blocking fire attacks to B-rank. Removed the bolded part. Changes in bold.

    Doton: Chikyuu Enchou (Doton: Earth Dome)

    Type: Defence
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: N/A
    Chackra cost: 50
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: By focusing the users earth chackra, the user gathers his earth chackra and keeps doing so and then covers himself with earth in a dome made from rock-hard thick earth material that is so thick (about 3 foot thick), and strong enough to block Fire, wind and earth justu's up to S-rank, but lightning (since it being strong against against earth) can pierce the dome with a A-rank attack, however water being the opposite (weak against earth), the dome can block Forbidden-rank water attacks. The user can de-activate the dome anytime he wants. It takes up so much chackra because of the amount of chackra you are putting into the dome to make it so thick.

    Note: Can only be used 3 times in battle.
    Note: Can only be taught/used by -Hatake-.
    Note: The user cannot use any S-ranks the next turn because of the amount of chackra it drains.

    Fixed what you said to fix .

    ~All Approved~ Check the last one, I fixed the rank it can block.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-12-2011 at 10:27 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦


    Range: Mid
    Description: The Hammer is of unknown origins. The wielder of the Hammer feels as if the hammer weighs 10g to others it feels as if it weighs 3tonnes. Being struck by it is the equivalent to a punch of this weight. It can be thrown by the user and called back thanks to a seal on the hammer and the user. It has the ability to cast lightning from it that is similar to a chidori spear that reaches mid range and does not require handseals. If the user strikes the earth it will cause an earthquake that goes to Mid range causing nearby enemies to simply fall over and negates their current jutsu. If spun continuously it will also cause a hurricane to mid range and throw opponents to long range and disperse any shadow clones.

    Restrictions:
    • Can only cast Hurricane once per battle
    • Hammer is not indestructible
    • Can only cause 1 Earthquake
    • Using Lightning from Hammer counts as a turn
    • Can only be wielded by Thor




    ~Declined~ I will not accept any jutsu that use font, size change, aligned/centered text or spoilers for anything else then pictures. Re-submit in a more readable way.
    Thank you.

    Note: Please try and keep all your submission in one post. If necessary, edit your last post that wasn't checked and add your new submissions in it.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-12-2011 at 10:28 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Raiton: El Thor): God Of Thunder
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: By gathering a larger amount of lightning chakra inside users body and building it up inside him the user performs the following set of handseals (Dragon-Bird-Boar-Tiger) the user will release all of the lightning chakra he gathered into sky making thunder clouds around the battlefield.The user then starts gathering all of the electricity from the clouds into his hands shaping it into one large sphere of lightning and after the sphere is fully created/formed the user then releases it from his hands and creates an enormous blast of lightning aiming at the opponent.After the sphere of lightning has been released it can no longer be controled. If the user gets caught in it, it will harm him also.
    Note: The user takes 20 damage because the lightning he was shaping in his hands.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: None of the lightning jutsu can be used the following turn.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Harnessing the power of thundercloud to make an powerful lightning technique...I wonder where I saw that before. Too similar to Kirin.

    (Doton: Ro-Ringu Harinezumi): Rolling Hedgehog
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The user starts by gathering larger amounts of doton chakra in his body wich he then channels into his legs and uses his legs to spread all of his gathered chakra into ground.User then performs a single handseal: Snake.And from the earth rises a four small creatures with spikes on their back resembeling the hedgehogs.The headgehogs can be made either out of the mud or earth or rocks.Can be used for both offensive and defensive purposes.These hedgehogs roll at very high speed and leave a smaller damage in the ground.Mud Hedgehogs can quickly trap their opponents by making the ground at opponents legs very soft and creating a pitfall.While Earth Headgoges are used for defense they can create a shield out of their back resembeling an fortress of spikes.Hedgehogs made of Rock are used for offense they quickly roll around opponent producing several hundreds of spikes from their back wich can pierce trought the opponent causing him fatal wounds.
    Note: 4 Hedgehogs are instantly created(10 chakra per earch,40 in total)
    Note: All 4 of them can be used for either offense or defense.
    Note: All 4 of them need to be made from the same type: either rock/earth/stones.
    Note: No earth jutsu can be used the following turn.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.

    ~Declined~ OP. All of those hedgehog could be considered individual jutsus. Hundreds of spikes that gives fatal wounds? Auto-decline. Lower the abilities a lot.

    (Kami no Howaido Hato): Paper White Pigeons
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60(+10 from the explosive tags that are hiden)
    Description: Konan uses her both ninjutsu and paper jutsu specialty to create several white pigeons made out a very sharp paper.When created pigeons instantly fly to their opponent and start to cut them in several angles.Each and every pigeon has a explodive tag in it and when a target is cut they rapidly explode causing a fatal damage to the opponent and blinding them.To use this jutsu (Bodi No Pe-Pa Jutsu) - Body Of Paper technique has to be performed first.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: The explosion blindes the opponent and makes him stunned for one turn.

    ~Declined~ What's with these OP customs? Fatally wounded and stunned for 1 turn? You're trying to go for the easy instant win.

    (Pe-Pa-Doragon): Paper Dragon
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: After using body of paper the user can turn all sheets into one large dragon made out of the razor sharp paper edges.The dragon moves around the opponent annoying him and slowly traping the opponent in sheets of paper restricting their movements for one turn.When opponent is trapped dragon then releases all of his paper accros the battlefield and attacks the opponent with his paper from all possible directions hiting opponents vital spots and causing a fatal damage.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: No S Ranked paper jutsu can be used the following turn.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Katon: Nenshou Subeta): Blazing Sword
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The user gathers a larger amount of fire chakra inside his lungs wich he then exhales around his sword.Making a wide,thick layers of flames around his sword.When its created the user can wield it like a regural sword and it is able to create a great burning damage with the simple wave of it.The user then start spinning his sword at a very high speed producing several thousand of burning ignitable sparks wich can tartet opponent from the front or back.This causes a very high degree of burns to the opponent.Wich makes it hard for him to get close to the user.
    Note: Needs to have a weapon such as sword,katana etc.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: No fire jutsu the following turn
    Note: The user takes 10 Damage from the burns he receives from the sparks.
    Looks:


    ~Declined~ OP -___-]
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Its been a complete week and few hours since my last Submission

    (Buki: Oni Subeta) - Weapon: Demon Sword
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: It is a special sword named Demon Sword and was wielded by a true shinobi named Dante and it was passed down to his brave family member i.e. Enzup, after many hard works. This Sword is 1.5 m high and 15 cm broad. The Sword has its affinity towards lightning and can use upto A-rank lightning. And also the Sword can protect the user from any lightning jutsu as the user will intake the lightning jutsu of the opponent in his sword and will pass that lightning to the ground by stabbing the ground with his sword, or that lightning can be used in combo with combining it with other element like water, but that jutsu (which has to be combined with the opponent's lightning) has to be used instantly after intaking the opponent's lightning.
    And also this Sword is mainly popular due to its shape and structure i.e. it has a trigger beside the handle of the sword, which can be pulled and then the sword bends by making a right angle to the blade and the handle, then the blade of the sword starts spinning very fast in clockwise direction, then user can fly by facing the sword in upward direction, just like helicopter's blades.
    Note: ~User can block any lightning jutsu by passing it in ground. User can do this to all lightning jutsu because he is not absorbing it, he is just simply passing it underground.
    ~Can be put in bio, or if summoned then lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Can only be summoned 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.
    Look of Sword
    Front view of sword when spinning


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    (Oni Subeta: Herikoputa- Ken) - Demon Sword: Helicopter Blades
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User pulls the trigger and then the sword bends by making a right angle to the blade and the handle, then the blade of the sword starts spinning very fast in clockwise direcion, just like helicopter's blades, which can block any jutsu upto B-Rank within its size.
    ~Can only be used by using the "(Buki: Oni Subeta) - Weapon: Demon Sword".
    ~As this is simply spinning of the sword, so it can be done any no. of times.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.
    Front view of sword when spinning


    ~Both Declined~ Don't know what's up with that sword but it's been submitted 3 times by 3 different member lately. I think the first one was named "red queen" look it up. I can't accept this one because you both use that "trigger" ability of the sword. Similar technique already exist.
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    (Ninjustu: Chakra Oushou) - Chakra King
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points: 80 (if got hit by sword or claw)
    Description: The user creates a chakra manipulated king like creature made up of pure chakra that surrounds and protects the user as it can act on his own. The chakra king always remains with the user. The chakra king has a sword in his right hand and chakra claw in his left hand, which can be used to attack or defend. This chakra king has a total of 200 health, so in order to destroy it, one must give him 200 damage points, and also chakra king can cut through some earth techniques using his sword.
    Note: ~One must have a sword in his one hand and should make a rasengan in his other hand to activate the Chakra King.
    ~Does not have any effect of ninjutsu.
    ~Can't use any ninjutsu for next 2 turns.
    ~Lasts untill destroyed.
    ~As the moment the chakra king is destroyed, user gets exhausted and fatigue due to which his speed decreases by 1 level for next 2 turns.
    ~20 More chakra will be required to perform any jutsu for next 2 turns.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.



    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Susano'o rip off.
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    (Myou Mo-Do) - Dark Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: When user receives injury or gets hurt in the battlefield, then user closes his eyes and memorizes all the bad things happened in his whole life, all the pain, sadness and darkness of his life. Due to which he user gets very angry and a few drops of tears is seen in his eyes and wants to kill everyonw who comes in his way. A dark chakra is observed around his whole body. Due to the wrath and the dark chakra the user gains +15 speed, gives extra 50% damage points and receives 50% less damage points to any jutsu. While in the dark mode genjustu upto A-Rank have no effect on it. Also in this mode, he can sense the chakra and the danger.
    Note: ~This mode can only be used once per battle and lasts for 4 turns.
    ~ Before entering in dark mode, user first has to be injured for awakening his feelings.
    ~After the dark mode is over, the user gets very exhausted and fatigue due to which the speed is decreased by 5 levels.
    ~Cannot use any jutsu above B-Rank.
    ~Gives less 20 damage points, receives 20 more damage points and requires 25 more chakra points for any jutsu.
    ~The all demerits lasts for complete 2 turns and after that user comes to normal.
    Look of user, when dark chakra covers him.


    ~Declined~ I'm pretty sure I declined a very similar technique lately, if it was yours, you always need to quote your last submission when re-submitting while putting the added part in bold. If it wasn't you, then don't resubmit since this jutsu already exist.
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    (Fuuton: Zennou Clap) - Wind Stye: Almighty Clap
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user spread his arms and then clap with all his power in the direction of target. The huge amount of wind blows with wind blades in that direction, making the opponent flow with it by giving him the injury due to wind blades and/or repelling any fire style jutsu upto A-rank with double the speed and effect, as it has affinity and polarity towards fire.
    Note: ~Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ OP, lower the abilities.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Katon: chou no Jutsu) - Fire sword technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: This technique allows the user to create two fire swords from their hands using the chakra within their hands,this Jutsu Can cut through Objects and they can burn the opponent as well.
    Note: The swords only last for 2 turns.
    Note:Can only use Once per battle.

    ~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

    (Katon: Hiendan Jutsu) – Fire release:Hell Rising
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user focuses on his chakra which then he sends into the ground and then using that chakra he creates flames which he send up wards from the ground to get his enemy.

    Looks much like this:



    Note:The jutsu can only be used once per battle.
    Note:No fire Jutsu above A-rank for the next 2 turns

    ~Declined~ Elaborate on the description, don't rely too much on the .gif

    (Katon Raiton katans) - Fire/lightning Sword
    Rank: S-rank
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: This technique allows the user to create a fire sword which the User sends Lightning chakra to make it a Lightning/fire sword which can be used to cut through objects and slash enemies.

    The sword will look like this but no shell on the handle,at the start:



    Note:No Lightning Jutsu above S-rank for the next 3 turns.
    Note:The Jutsu last for 3 turns.
    Note:The user can only perform this Jutsu Once per battle.

    ~Approved~

    (Shinten Kugutsu Juin no Jutsu)-Mind Puppet Switch Cursed Seal Technique

    Rank:S-rank
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid-long range
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A

    Description: User of this technique firstly transfers their mind into a puppet laid somewhere in advance or planted, near the vicinity of an enemy's predicted path, before manipulating it to attack an intended opponent. When the opponent counters and inflicts damage upon the puppet, the cursed seal will take effect, causing the two consciousness (that of the user's inside the puppet and that of the victim who countered) to switch. Consequently, the user will gain full control of the opponent's body, while the victim's mind remains trapped within the immobile puppet.

    Like the original technique, the user's body is left defenceless while the ability is active and any injury done to the victim's body is also reflected upon their true body, but this can be rectified if the user cancels the technique just before any damage is received.

    Note:Can only be used once per battle
    Note:If the user's partner decides to kill the opponent while the user is the body he/she will Die
    Note:If the puppet is destroyed the User can't return to his/her body for a Turn.
    Note:Yamanaka Clan Only

    ~Declined~ Please explain how you create the puppet and make it so you need to have a firm physical contact between the puppet and the opponent to make the switch (grabbing him arm or his sword which is connected to him is an example of a firm contact).

    (Katon: Zukokku)-Fire Release: Smart Work

    Rank:S-rank
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid-long range
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 60

    Description:The user fires a small fireball that erupts into a giant fire-storm after making contact with a surface, causing widespread destruction to the area. Since the flames travel along the ground, and cover such a wide area this is a difficult technique to evade. When combined with Wind Release: Pressure Damage, this technique is amplified to the point of being able to evaporate a large amount of water in an instant.

    Note:Can use 3 times per battle
    Note:No fire techniques above A-rank for the next 2 turns

    ~Declined~ After review from a member, it was pointed out that this is a rip off of a cannon technique. If you re-submit cannon, you will be banned from this thread for 2 weeks.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Submissions starting on the 10/3/2011 ending on the 10/9/2011
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Katon: Shinkirō) - Fire Style: Mirage
    Type: Defensive / Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user, after using a fire style jutsu, will use the heated area around them to refract light similar to how the Hidden Mist: Eye Depravation jutsu works. This will cause the air around the user to reflect the image of the sky at the opponent, similar to how a mirage works. This causes the user to seemingly have disappeared from sight.
    Restrictions:
    ~Usable twice.
    ~Doujutsu can see through this.
    ~Must have mastered Fire.
    Declined, already exists

    (Satetsu Tatsumaki) - Iron Sand Tornado
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive / Defensive
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user spins their Iron Sand in front of them and sends it at the opponent as a high-speed tornado of Iron Sand. The Iron Sand can destroy B-Rank Doton objects at a high rate and can cut an opponent up.
    Restrictions:
    ~Usable three times.

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Toku View Post
    (Suiton- Mizu Parusu) Water release- Water Pulse
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 100(-15 to the user)
    Description: the user performs 3 hand seals while focusing his water chakra into his gut to spit out a sphere of water. The sphere then grows in size as it starts to tear up the ground till its stopped. The farther the sphere travels the bigger its size.
    *Note: No Water for the next turn or A-rank and above Water the turn after that.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: Can only be used by Toku

    (Doton- Dosei no Hanabi ) Earth release- Earthen Fireworks
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 100(-15 to the user)
    Description: the user will string together a chain of hand seals and slam his hand on the ground releasing huge amounts of earth chakra causing chunks of earth to protrude from under the opponent to jag him as they begin to explode causing even more damage from the shrapnel being released from the explosions. The radius of the jutsu covers short range all around the opponent and the explosions reach mid-range. If used within mid range, the user will need to defend against this technique as well.
    *Note: No Earth for the next turn or A-rank and above earth the turn after that.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: Can only be used by Toku.

    Declined. Explain the distance bit to me. it's a bit confusing.
    (Suiton- Mizu Parusu ) Water release- Water Pulse
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 100(-15 to the user)
    Description: the user performs hand seals while focusing his water chakra into his gut to spit out a sphere of water. The sphere then grows in size from the moment its released till it’s stopped. As the sphere travels it tears up the ground in the direction of its target. The farther the sphere travels the bigger it grows in size. It’s size has no effect on its rank.
    *Note: No S-rank and above Water the next turn.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: The strain from this jutsu does -15 damage to the user.
    *Note: Can only be used by Toku

    ~Declined~ Either make it S-rank or change your restrictions and description so it can be classified as Forbidden. You need physical drawbacks, -15 won't do anything in a real fight.

    (Doton- Dosei no Hanabi ) Earth release- Earthen Fireworks
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 100(-15 to the user)
    Description: the user will string together a chain of hand seals and slam his hand on the ground releasing huge amounts of earth chakra causing chunks of earth to protrude from under the opponent to jag him as they begin to explode causing even more damage from the shrapnel being released from the explosions. The radius of the jutsu, covers short range all around the opponent. If used within short range, the user will need to defend against this technique as well.
    *Note: No Earth for the next turn or S-rank the turn after that.
    *Note: All Earth jutsus will lose -10 DP for the rest of battle.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: The strain from this jutsu does -15 damage to the user as well.
    *Note: Can only be used by Toku.

    ~Declined~ There are already plenty of jutsu similar to this one. Enough with the explosion of elements.

    (Suiton- Mizu Gattorin Juu) Water release- Water Gatlin Gun
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 120(-15 to the user)
    Description: the user will gather his water chakra into his dominant hand and mold it into a gatlin gun of water that will begin firing countless water bullets. This technique is a more advanced form of the "water gun technique" but puts a great strain on the user‘s arm as well as leaves it damaged.
    *Note: Cant use water for the next turn or A-rank and above 2 turns after that.
    *Note: The strain from this jutsu does -15 damage to the user.
    *Note: Can only be used Toku.

    ~Declined~ What's with all those Forbidden techniques? Look what I said above.

    (Katon- Honoo no supaiku) Fire release- Flame Spikes
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: the user will focus his fire chakra under the opponent raising it out of the ground as spikes of fire that will burn the opponent as they emerge.
    *Note: can only be used 3x per battle.
    *Note: can only be used by Toku.

    ~Approved~

    (Kuchiyose no jutsu- Duffy Ahiru) Summoning- Duffy the Duck
    Type: Attack/Defend
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: the user will summon Duffy, the oldest son of Luffy, by performing the necessary hand seals and smearing his blood on his palm and clapping his hands together. Duffy has an elemental affinity of Lightning allowing him to release lightning from his wings to strike opponents. He is big enough to carry one person in flight and can fly at high speeds. He is able to use A-rank lightning jutsus and gives them (+10 damage points) when performing a user/summon combo.
    *Note: can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: can only stay in play for a total of 5 turns.
    *Note: Lightning bolts strikes are A-rank and count as one of the jutsus of a turn.

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Doton: Kakuchō) - Earth Release: Extension
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user will materlize earth and can extend from any part of their body an earthen arm that can grab hold of an object or enemy and crush or hold them from great distances. This technique is similiar to 'Tailed Beast Skill: Chakra Arm'.

    ~Declined~ I know what you're trying to do, but it's not phrase correctly. From the description, it looks like you're doing 2 separate thing when materializing the earth and extending an arm of your body.

    (Rokkaku Sekizai Kanshi) - Hexagonal Stone Watch
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will excute a little chain of hand signs Consisting of three. A Haxagonal formed plate will appear on the users chest with a seal in each corner, which a seal in each corner. It's seal have each special ability and marked with a special Kanji, representing what they now stand for. The top left one is marked with the Kanji which represents fire, top right - water, middle right - lightning, middle left - wind, lower right - earth and lower left wears the kanji for illusion. By tapping their hand on one of the seals, the favoured seal will be activated and it's effects will be put in place. Once all seals are tapped and drained the Hexagonal plate will crumble.
    Fire seal; The seal located top left in the Hexagonal plate. Once the user taps the seal it will release a burst of fire chakra through the users body boosting the user's fire techniques with +5, for two turns. Once activated it cannot be activated again for the rest of the battle.
    Water seal; The seal located top right in the Hexagonal plate. Once the user taps the seal it will release a burst of water chakra through the users body boosting the user's water techniques with +5, for two turns. Once activated it cannot be activated again for the rest of the battle.
    Lightning seal; located middle right of the Hexagonal plate. Once the user taps the seal it will release a burst of lightning chakra through the users body boosting the user's lightning techniques with +5, for two turns. Once activated it cannot be activated again for the rest of the battle.
    Wind seal; The seal located middle left in the Hexagonal plate. Once the user taps the seal it will release a burst of wind chakra through the users body boosting the user's wind techniques with +5, for two turns. Once activated it cannot be activated again for the rest of the battle.
    Earth seal; The seal located lower left in the Hexagonal plate. Once the user taps the seal it will release a burst of earth chakra through the users body boosting the user's earth techniques with +5, for two turns. Once activated it cannot be activated again for the rest of the battle.
    Illusion seal; The seal located lower right in the Hexagonal plate. Once the user taps the seal it will release foreign chakra throughout the entire chakra system of the users body for whole two turns, the foreign chakra will make him immune to genjutsus meanwhile activated. Once activated it cannnot be activated again for the rest of the battle.
    ~Restrictions;
    Can only be used once per battle(The tapping of seals can be used untill theres no more seals though.).
    Two turns inbetween each usuage.
    Activations of a seal doesn't count for a move, only the Hexagonal Plate to appear, counts for a move.
    Only one seal can be activated at a time.

    ~Declined~ I have nothing against this technique, but the restrictions are off (also, re-read your description, there's some redundancy). Make it so you can only tap 3 hexagons (otherwise it's just a free boost for the rest of the match; 12 turns). Make it count as a move every time you activate a seal. Finally, any drawbacks?

    (Fuuinjutsu: Doroki!) - Sealing Technique: Surprise!
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This seal wears the Kanji 風 which stands for wind, it's located underneath one of the users armpits. This is a rather advanced sealing technique as it activates itself upon the user getting hit by foreign lightning chakra, and paralyzed. Upon activation it will in an instant release a light amount of wind chakra through the users entire body and kills off anykind of foreign lightning/lightning chakra that shoulda been within his body and woulda paralyzed him or given any further harm to the user.
    ~Useable twice, a seal under each armpit.
    ~Once used Fuuinjutsu above B-rank cannot be used next round.

    Edit where you feel like it please. ^^

    ~Declined~ I know you want to counter Chidori Nagashi, or any lightning jutsu that paralyze, but this isn't how it work. If you read the description of Nagashi on wiki, you see that the paralyzing effect is caused by the sudden contraction of the muscle, it's not related to any remaining lightning chakra left in the body. It's more similar to a cramp.
    (Doton: Kakuchō) - Earth Release: Extension
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user will materlize an earthen arm from any part of their body which can extend to great distances to grab, hold, crush, objects as the user pleases. This technique is similiar to 'Tailed Beast Skill: Chakra Arm'.

    Tried to re-phrase the Extension jutsu, and dropped the idea of the Hexagonal.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    New:

    (Doton: Dankai) - Earth Release: Phase
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary, Defensive
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: This technique allows the user to freely manipulate his body into dust via releasing his earth-affliated chakra from his pores at will. Though once active, the user retains his physical appearence, as opposed to looking like dust; it only becomes apparent when a physical object interacts with him. As stated when using this the user is immune to physical interaction but this does not only apply for ninja weapons but also solid-based elements, such as earth, diamond etc. etc. As it simply will pass through him whereafter he will reform.
    ~Can be used thrice per battle
    ~Lasts two turns per use
    ~One turn inbetween usage.

    If you think the ''Lasts two turns per use'' feel free to edit it to one turn per use.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ No jutsu that turns your body into an element (making you intangible) will be approved.

    (Shiādarou!) - Sheer Will!
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: When the user is struck is serious sitautions which can result in death, like when the user's body would be impossible to move physically(Which can be due various reasons, like paralyzation.) and chakra systems shutdown. The use of a very strong determation the user will force it through with sheer will, making him capable of contiuing to move, even though the body wouldn't have allowed it.
    ~Useable once.
    ~Lasts 2 turns.

    ~Pending~ please elaborate on the physical reason as to why you manage to move. Give me an explanation. If your spine is broken will you still be able to get up O-o? Show the limitation of this technique.

    (Bishamon-Mura) - War-Lots of Grass
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user will materlize a high amount of blades made out of chakra in the air, at the users desired location. These blades emit a distinctive and intimidating howling sound upon generation but despite the evident danger they possess from being suspended precariously above the intended victims, both of these qualities serve only to belie the technique's true nature. The attack's actual threat lies within its fragility, which results in the production of numerous razor-sharp shards that descend down at the target when disturbed by the foreign chakra(Opponent's), subsequently mincing the enemy to pieces.
    ~Can be use twice per battle.
    ~The Blades last aslong they haven't been destroyed.
    ~The blades would 'detonate' when foreign chakra goes through the air, past them, or jutsu being fired from target's location.

    ~Declined~ Please re-word this jutsu to make it clearer. Are they suspended up until the opponent touch them? Sends chakra into them? If so, where are they precisely placed? Considering they need to be triggered, their location is extremely relevant.

    (Ashura Kai) - Asura Solution
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 90 (15 damage to the user itselff.)
    Description: By generating and subsequently storing a collective entity of chakra, the user is capable of containing an immense amount of friction between his two hands in a distinctive visible aura. Projecting this resultant atmosphere both forward and outward with a swift swing of his arms, the intense heat produced by the violent vibrations disperses in almost explosive manner, instantaneously incinerating the majority of objects in the immediate vicinity of the attack's trajectory.
    ~Useable twice.
    ~Two turns inbetween each usage.
    ~Due the strain the user cannot use his hands/arms the following turn.

    ~Declined~ OP. I get the fact that your hands are protected by the heat because of the chakra layer, but why isn't the rest of your body incinerated as well? And make it everything you touch, not everything near them. Don't make it last for more then the move in which you activate the jutsu. If you are to keep it a Forbidden rank technique, work on the restriction to fit such rank. Add drawbacks.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    It's new week from my last Submission 09-26-2011

    (Doton : Terakotta-gun) – Earth Style : Terracotta army
    Rank: S
    Type: Offense/Defence/Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: By utilizing earth-based chakra, the user summon 100 legendary Chinese army made of rock, the Terracotta army which their body as solid as the hardening tech can be use to protect the user for incoming attack and only could be destroyed by strong lightning, they will move charge with rumbling sound, then attack the opponent with strong fist and kick from different angle and direction.

    Restriction :

    -Able to defense from Earth, water and fire attack with similar rank and 1 F rank (when they are gather as a human shield in front of the user)
    -Only usable once in every battle
    -No Doton jutsu for the next 2 turn
    -Can only be use and taught by Oasis Nara


    Picture of Terracotta Army

    ~Declined~ OP. I won't go into much detail about that once since it'd take me forever to cover all of it. Simply lower the abilities and overall rank it can defend against. Also, take out the part where it can only be destroyed by strong lightning.


    (Kugutsu no Jutsu: Satetsu no keimusho) - Puppet Technique: iron sand prison)
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: Sasori whilst using the third Kazekage puppet manipulate the iron sand which surround the enemy into a cage of solid iron which will trap the enemy inside.
    Note: Can only be used by Sasori bio
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per match

    ~Approved~ added the restriction


    (Jiton: Satetsu o ikiru) - Magnetism Release: Living Iron Sand
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80(-10 to the user)
    Description: The 3rd Kazekage puppet gather his massive iron sand into the sky then pour them down across the battle field like rain of iron sand spike which will impale the enemy, then iron sand will cover the entire battle field excluding sasori’s ground, and will suck down and sink whoever step on it.

    Restriction :
    *Can only be used twice per battle.
    *No Iron sand tech for the next 2 turns
    * Can only be used by Oasis Nara
    *Can only be used by Sasori bio (3rd Kazekage puppet)

    ~Declined~ What's up with the bold part? Either take it out or elaborate on it.

    (San-sō Chūgoku no idaina kabe) Three Layer Chinese Great Wall
    Type: Defense
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: N/A (-20 to the user)
    Description: The user must do blood sacrifice then perform 10 serial hand seal, slam his both hands into the ground to summon the Chinese great wall in front of the user in form of three layer with different usage, the wall capable of blocking almost any attack up to Forbidden Rank according to the layer of the wall.

    Layers ability:
    ~First Layer, takes the direct attack
    ~2nd Layer, mitigate the attack power
    ~3rd Layer, completely dispel the attack

    Restriction :

    *Can only be used once per battle.
    *No Ninjutsu for the rest of the battle
    *Only A-Rank jutsu for the next turn
    *The user takes damage -20
    * Can only be used by Oasis Nara

    ~Declined~ It's Forbidden, so there needs to be some serious physical drawbacks from it. Work on that part and make it so that S-rank lightning can pierce it (considering your wall if made or rock).

    (Fuuton: Kyodaina Rasen Shuriken) - Wind Release: Massive Spiraling Shuriken
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (-15 to the user)
    Description: Another variant of Rasengan and wind manipulation but the different is the user gather his massive wind chakra with his both hand raises upward toward the sky then massive size spiraling sphere shuriken look alike start to forming above the user palms, this massive rasen shuriken would be thrown by the user using his both hands and flies to the enemy with high speed nearly unavoidable as it wind based affinity, , this massive rasen shuriken not only will encases group of ten people at once in a huge violent orb of slicing wind and cuts on the microscopic level but also shattered their flesh brutally into pieces which will cause sudden death.

    Restriction:
    -usable once in every battle
    -Causing extremely exhausted to the user and will not be able to use any jutsu for the next 1 turn
    -After the next 1 turn, Only A-Rank jutsu for the next 3 turn
    -Can’t perform jutsu which required hand seal after the next turns for the rest of the battle as the user both palm injured badly
    -If using Kage bunshin to perform it then the user will not be able to use Kage Bunshin for the rest of the battle and the remain Kage bunshin shall be disperse while performing it.
    -Can only be counter by F-Rank jutsu
    -Can only be use by Oasis Nara and can't be taught to others

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ No more rasengan customs will be approved
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (pa-fekuto-shi-rudo) Perfect Shield
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:While the user is in possesion of his sword he holds it with one of his hand and tranfers pure chakra in it and rotates it in a circular motion and a shield of pure chakra is formed which is capable enough of blocking all the elemental jutsu upto A rank(shield is broken completely)
    and below (Shiel suffers a little damage but can take on one more attack)
    ~No suiton jutsu in the same chance~
    ~need to be taught by gitanshu~
    ~can only be used 2 times~




    (tsuwamono-shi-rudo) Warriors shield
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description- It is a shield of warrior and was wielded by a true shinobi and it's defense was said to be unbreakable it was found by gitanshu after many hard work and it was taken by him in his possesion this shield is capable enough of blocking all elemental jutsu up to B rank and is a mark of a true warrior,but it can only block small projectiles only like small wind bullets.
    ~need not be summoned if placed in a bio~
    ~can only be taught by gitanshu~
    ~can only block up to B rank~
    ~can only block up to 4 attacks per match~

    |Approved|

    (kyuugeki-raishuu) sudden attack
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description- The user will attack the opponent with his katana but will have a small dagger attached to the katana tip but will be hard to see because of the katana and the dagger resemblance as he will be attacking him with his katana the user will quickly use wind chakra to give a sudden push to the dagger which will then can pierce through the opponent if used properly
    ~can only be taught by gitanshu~
    ~Doujutsu can see through it ~

    Why should only doujutsu users be only able to see it. I would think a skill taijutsu/kenjutsu user should be able to see the dagger when shot to be able to avoid it. Edit resubmit.


    (kyuugeki-raishuu) sudden attack
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description- The user will attack the opponent with his katana but will have a small dagger attached to the katana tip but will be hard to see because of the katana and the dagger resemblance as he will be attacking him with his katana the user will quickly use wind chakra to give a sudden push to the dagger which will then can pierce through the opponent if used properly
    ~can only be taught by gitanshu~
    ~Doujutsu & TAIJUTSU SPECIALIST AND KENJUTSU SPECIALIST can see through it ~

    ~Declined~ How could anyone not notice there's a dagger on top of the sword? Unless you come up with a better description (for both the dagger tip and how the jutsu works), I'll be forced to decline it for good.

    UPGRADING

    (tsuwamono-shi-rudo) Warriors shield
    Type: Defense
    Rank: F
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 90
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description- After using the shield for some time gitanshu found its true power and potential its now able to block A rank medium size projectiles and twice in a match gitanshu can transfer his chakra into the shield which will be used in addition with the power of shield and form a green circle around him which is able to block any incoming attack.
    ~need not be summoned if placed in a bio~
    ~can only be taught by gitanshu~
    ~can only block up to A rank~
    ~can only be infused with users chakra twice~
    ~the fusing will also count as a move and will also be counted as 4 of the attack which the shield is capable of blocking~
    ~blocking of small projectile like kunai is note counted as move and is not even counted as one of the 4 block moves~
    ~can only block up to 4 attacks per match

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Simply OP.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Ichigo.. View Post
    (Yõton: Kyojin Maguma Gouben) - Lava Release: Giant Lava Pool
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This technique creates a Lava pool beneath the target (relative to them) that immobilizes them. If, your opponent is sucked by the lave your opponent will melt
    (even bevore your opponent touches the lava). The size of the Lava pool is proportioned to the amount of chakra of the user.

    .Note: Can only be taught by Ichigo Kurosaki.
    .Note: Can only be used 3 times in RP battle.
    .Note: The user must have mastered the lava element.
    .Note: The user must have mastered doton and katon.


    ~Declined~ Define the size of the pool, the time it takes to form, whether the ground will shake as the lava comes out of it or simply erupt in a blast...etc Make it 2 times per battle.
    ~Resubmiting~

    (Yõton: Kyojin Maguma Gouben) - Lava Release: Giant Lava Pool
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This technique creates a Lava pool beneath the target (relative to them) that immobilizes them. The user simply puts his/her hands on the ground and send a portion of his/her chakra into the ground the ground which causes the earth to split and so cause the lava to rise up from the cracks in the ground so the Lava will simply erupt from the ground. Remember the cracks get bigger and bigger because the lava melts the earth that blocking the lava from rising up.. If, your opponent is sucked by the lave your opponent will melt.

    .Note: Can only be used by Ichigo Kurosaki.
    .Note: Can only be used 2 times in RP battle.
    .Note: The user must have mastered the lava element.
    .Note: The user must have mastered doton and katon.

    .Note: The user must be higher than sannin rank.

    ~Approved~ Took out the last two lines of your description.

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    (Yoton: Karyuu No Houkou) - Lava Release: Swirling Volcanic Roar
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: After Performing the serpant, dragon & tiger handseal the user takes in a deep breath as they bring about the ideals of most fire exhaling jutsu into play. Than the user will inhale some air and concentrate his/her chakra into the lungs and exhale a swirling roar made out of lava which he/she directs at the opponent this is made out of Volcanic ashes and lava. If, this jutsu hits it will caus you to die in a split second due to the heat of the lava and the flying hot ashes in the air. This jutsu can melt earth in a split second.
    (This jutsu is similar to fireball jutsu)

    .Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
    .Note: Can only be used if the user has mastered Earth & Fire.
    .Note: The user must be at sage lvl.
    .Note: After this jutsu is used the user can not use fire techniques for two turns.
    .Note: Can only be used by Ichigo.


    ~Declined~ Poor description and either change or take out the bold part. What is this jutsu? A roar, a lava shot or volcanic ash? If it's not clear to me it certainly won't be to your opponents.
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    (Doton: Kyojin Tsuchi Ganchuusou) - Earth Style: Giant Earth Spikes
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage Points: 50
    Descripton: The user goes underground and and channels his\her chakra into the surrounding earth and creates gigantic earth spikes each are 4 meters tall. This jutsu can be made in a short or mid distace.

    .Note: This jutsu can only be used while the user is still underground.
    .Note: This jutsu can only be used twice per battle.
    .Note: Can only be used by Ichigo.
    .Note: The user must have mastered earth to perform this jutsu.


    Feel free to edit anything like restrictions etc. to help the approval.

    ~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.
     
         
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    (Doton/Fuuton: Hikui Tenkuu Assaku no Jutsu) - Earth/Wind release Low Air Pressure Technique
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary, Offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost:20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user creates an earth dome 15-20 feets in diameter(depending on the chakra used by the user) enclosing the opponent inside it.Then the user creates a thick wind shield inside and outside the earth dome. Then, by removing the air from inside the dome, the air pressure inside the dome drops dramatically, causing anyone inside the dome to fall unconscious due to lack of oxygen.

    ~Can be used thrice.
    ~Once used, the user cannot use this jutsu again for next 2 turns.
    ~cannot use A-rank or above earth techniques for the next turn.
    ~Can only be used by -Avenger-

    ~Declined~ Vacuum release is an approved CE.

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    (Katon: Daikonran) Fire Release: Pandemonium
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage point: 100
    Description: The user carefully sets different parts of the battlefield on fire before hand(in previous 2 turns.The fire can also be from opponent/s jutsu's) and then sets this very special technique to use. Drawing upon the heat energy from all the surrounding flames, the user transforms them into spheres of purely charged heat through the use of particular set of hand seals. Then, as the seals are completed, the balls begin to surround the opponent. Finally, they close in on the enemy at incredible speeds and the heat is completely absorbed into their bodies… causing them to explode
    from all the internal body pressures and other biological processes which have failed due to the intense rise in body temperature.
    The user can, also delay this process by dragging each sphere through the air and disabling
    an opponent’s appendages(hands and legs) one by one before finishing them off with this jutsu.

    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~When the user sets the battlefield on fire in the previous 2 turns, the fire jutsu's used should be B-Rank and above.
    This does not apply to opponent's fire jutsu's.
    ~Can only be used by -Avenger-

    ~Declined~ Temperature release is an approved CE.

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    (Raiton: Dendou Kaitengi no Jutsu) Lightning Release: Electric Gyroscope Technique
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive,Defensive
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: 40 (+5 with every turn)
    Damage: 80(-5 with very turn to the user)
    Description: This technique offers the user both offensive and defensive capabilities. The user forms the necessary handseals and, by focusing his chakra, creates a pair of rings of electricity around himself, that spin about like a gyroscope, maintaining a constant electric field throughout its rings, which is 1.8m in diameter & the user is at the centre of it. If anything from outside attempts to enter these rings, the rings will shoot a blast of electricity strong enough to knock back a person and completely deflect any projectile. The shield will effectively block taijutsu attacks and ninjutsu attacks. An attacker using a strong taijutsu will be able to enter the rings of the gyroscope, but will still suffer an electric shock as he/she enters, which paralyses him/her for few seconds. The user is able to move around while the shield is active, however at a slightly slower speed.

    ~Can be used twice.
    ~It last for 2 turns.
    ~It can be undone by the user anytime during those 2 turns.
    ~When using this jutsu, the user cannot use any B-rank or above lightning jutsu's till the jutsu lasts.
    ~It can block taijutsu and ninjutsu attacks upto upto B-rank.
    ~Can only be used by -Avenger-


    This is my first submission, so please free feel to make any changes in the restrictions if necessary.

    ~Approved~ Made it twice per match and last 2 turns.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    New Submissions;
    (Pe-Pa Gikou - Zougeiro Ryouko ) Paper Technique - White Twin Tigers
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid - Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description:
    The Paper user will quickly use paper to from two tigers that look exactly the same with explosive tags on the inside of them. They both run at a speed faster than a shinobi, so they are able to close in on a target very quickly. They move on command of the user so they are able to move in formation and jump over objects. Once they get close enough they explode.

    Notes:
    - Usable once per battle
    - Only usable by Paper Technique users
    - Only usable/trainable by Dexter..


    ~Declined~ Either define "close enough" or make it so you activate the exploding tag with a hand seal.

    (Pe-Pa Gikou - Fuusa) Paper Technique - Blockade
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/A
    Description:
    The Paper user can use their paper to form a dome completely over and around them. Since the paper is fused with their chakra it is much harder than steel though it doesn't take on the properties of such. The user can use this dome to defend against an attack or to block the view of the target toward the user. Since the Paper is weak to Oil based techniques only Oil will be able to puncture the dome and hit the user in one hit.

    Notes:
    - Only defends against one A-Rank or below technique other than Oil
    - Usable twice per battle
    - Only usable by Paper Technique users
    - Only usable/trainable by Dexter..

    ~Declined~ Hard as steel and only oil can puncture it? It's only paper, try and keep that in mind in your re-submission.

    (Shikigami no Mai: Impale ) Dance of the Shikigami: Impale
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description:
    Konan will use her Origami and Ninjutsu skills to send out her paper and have it surround the target. Her paper moves very fast to surround the opponent, as soon as it gets around the target it instantly forms into razor sharp spikes that impale the user. The spike are the same size as the Earth Spike technique.

    Notes:
    - Only usable by Konan
    - Only usable once per battle
    - Unable to use A-Rank or Above Paper Technique during next turn.
    - Only usable/trainable by Dexter..

    ~Approved~

    (Shikigami no Mai: Boom ) Dance of the Shikigami: Boom
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description:
    Konan will form herself into paper and form into paper airplanes that fly at the user at such incredible speed and she can control them at will. Once close enough to the target they surround and cover the target, restricting them. After the target is covered, Konan then reform a little bit farther from the target and while she forms back up she replaces the target with explosive tags instead of her own sheets of paper. Then she cause the tags to explode.

    Notes:
    - Only usable by Konan
    - Only usable once per battle
    - Unable to use any Paper Techniques in next turn
    - Only usable/trainable by Dexter..

    ~Declined~ Please re-phrase the bold part, I'm unsure as to what you mean.

    (Pe-Pa Gikou - Ame Jakkunaifu) Paper Technique - Rain of Knives
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description:
    The Paper user will send up into the sky, hundreds of paper sheets. The user will then form each individual paper into a sharp knife that is capable of puncturing weaker earth techniques. The amount of paper looks as if it has covered the sky and the area it covers is very wide. The user will then send all the knives down at the target at once, capable of hitting all sides of the target.

    Notes:
    - Only usable once per battle
    - Unable to use A-Rank or Above Paper techniques during the next turn.
    - Only usable by a Paper Technique user
    - Only usable/trainable by Dexter..

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    This new CW will be replacing this and the one im replacing will be given to Rokusho and yes I see that its a armor with a shield and lance but they are all connected and its still considered a CW right?

    No, you can't give away a custom that you're getting rid of. Otherwise there' be no end to it. Definite no.

    3.)("Tetsusaiga" Raikou Buzzard Shikon) "Tetsusaiga" Lightning Buzzard Fang
    Type:Weapon
    Rank:S
    Range:Short (Mid-Long for special ability)
    Chakra Points: N/A (+30 for Wind Scar)
    Damage Points: N/A (+60 for Wind Scar)
    Description: Tetsusaiga is a special great sword carved with a special alloy making it as hard as cold steel and special feathers from the lightning buzzard, allowing it to channel lightning chakra for more cutting power. The fur at the end is a conductor, so the user is unaffected by Wind Scar. Due to its sheer size, it can over come smaller weapons such as Katanas, staffs, nunchucks etc. unless it has special properties. The weapon also has a special ability called "Wind Scar" where the user releases a blast/wave of yellow lightning that levels almost anything in its path. The weapon itself can absorb lightning of B-rank and lower to add to the power of Wind Scar.
    Notes:
    -Wind Scar is equal to A-rank Lightning
    -Wind scar can be used 4 times
    -Counts as one of the three used justu per turn
    -Can only absorb lightning of B-rank and lower
    -Can only absorb one lightning tech every 3 turns


    The sword itself and the move it uses




    "L.O.D Reach"
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack|Defend|Supplementary
    Range:N/A (Short-long for L.O.D Shot)
    Chakra:N/A (+30 for L.O.D Shot)
    Damage Points:N/A (60 for L.O.D Shot) (-10 to water and earth ninjutsu)
    Description: L.O.D Reach is actually a full body armor that can be summoned through a seal tattoo on the user's back. The armor itself is made of a special alloy built to be light so that it does not effect the user's mobility. The armor itself has no special properties about it but it is capable of enduring small impacts that could come from normal punches, kicks, kunais/shurikens (small amount up to 10 at once), etc. that do not have special properties. When the armor is released, it is equiped with a lance and an oversized shield which each have different abilities and are connected to the armor.

    So far so good...

    -L.O.D Shield: The L.O.D Shield has a special barrier made from 4 kanjis that are capable of blocking and dispersing incoming chakra based techniques with no definate mass up to A-rank meaning it can block any incoming jutsu with no particular solidness such as lightning, wind, fire, and other elements with no definate mass and can block anything up to D-rank, even other weapons with no particualr special abilities. The shield is practically big enough to cover the entire user's body so even full scale jutsus of B-rank wont affect him.

    ...try and slip in some drawbacks in there. You can't make it so easy as to be able to block 4 attacks up to A-rank without having some sort of restriction of drawbacks put on you...

    -L.O.D Lance: The L.O.D Lance is an advanced piece of equipment capable of converting chakra into the wind element to enhance it's piercing power being able to pierce through other armors and rock and can also be used as the medium for some wind based techniques that require a sword. As it is a lance it can only stab and not be swung as the point of sharpness is at the tip. Its special ability known as L.O.D Shot is when a large amount of chakra is channeled into the lance and is compressed at the tip of the spear. when released, it sends a shot of compressed wind at the opponent equal to A-rank with enough force to break bone and send them flying. This technique is clearly visible giving off a yellowish hue.

    ...Take out the ability to shoot blast from your spear, I don't care what you change it for but I've had enough of all those chakra blasting swords.

    Restrictions:
    -The armor is unfit for earth and water ninjutsu so these techniques do less damage than normal
    -The L.O.D Shield is only capable of blocking and dispersing 4 techniques in battle
    -the L.O.D Shield can't block incoming jutsus with a particular mass such as water, earth, or other elements with a definate mass besides D-rank
    -The L.O.D Lance can only shoot 4 L.O.D shots in battle
    -While wearing this equipment, the user is slowed in movement due to the heavy weapons but not drastically... ( I cannot match the speed of someone my rank who is a taijutsu specialist) Although, the giant shield and spear make up for that.
    -Once their abilities have been used up, the armor is reversed summoned back into the seal
    -The user cannot perform hand seals unless it only needs one hand while using the equipment
    -Can only be worn by Taiketsu Yagami


    ~Declined~ You can see my comments above for the armor, and now the restrictions: they're way off. No time limit for this armor and no limitations on the number of time you can summon it? Make the shield able to block 3 times.

    "L.O.D. Gatling Shot"
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:40
    Damage:10 per hit
    Description: The user will strike the air with his L.O.D Lance multiple times in quick succession while compressing and shooting bursts of chakra induced wind through the lance. Every strike from the lance has the piercing power of a wind induced kunai and is the size of a closed fist. The technique looks as if a barrage of small air bullets are being shot through the sky to a certain spot and are capable of punching holes in the target.
    Notes:
    -Counts as one of the times L.O.D. Shot can be used
    -Maximum of 8 shots through out the technique and each duration is a quarter of a second
    -No more L.O.D Shots that turn or the next

    ~Declined~ The L.O.D Lance was declined.

    (Fuuton/SUiton: Shindou Kaze) Wind/Water Style: Impact Wind
    Rank:A
    Type:Attack|Defend|Supplementary
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Description: the user will mold their hands as if they where trying to grab something but in actuallity, the user is condensing the air and moisture in a certain position around him/her causing the pressure to raise substantually. He will then control that wind/moisture and be able to do one of three things. 1.) The user will send it towards the enemy at very high speeds with bone breaking force and being able to blow them back one range. If the user were to send it down on top of the enemy, the impact would be strong enough to form a small crater in the floor. 2.) It could be used to block incoming jutsus from anywhere but the ground. 3.) It can be used to propel the user to any location above ground as far as long range. (Mid-range if used on water) The funny thing about this technique is that it has the force of wind and solidness of water making it stronger than wind based techniques alone but due to this, it is easily visible having a blue hue to it.
    Notes:
    -Usable 4 times
    -Can still be stopped by A-rank wind or water
    -Must be a ice user or have yin/yang training to use
    -Can only be taught by Taiketsu Yagami
    -This video will show what im talkin about for #1. Skip to 2:20 to see it in action and its not long lasting but near instant.
    -This is a pic of #2 and its only short-range


    ~Declined~ Being an Ice user doesn't give you the ability to simultaneously mold water and wind chakra independently. An Ice user will mix both of his chakra instinctively to form Ice chakra, but to mold both independently you need Yin Yang training. Do you have such training? Also, make it 3 times per match.

    (Fuuton/Suiton: Kasane Torune-do) Water/Wind Style: Pile Tornado
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description: Similar to Impact Wind, the user will condense the surrounding air and moisture into a single point around his/her leg raising the pressure substantually at an even more condensed point. The user will then kick with all their might while releasing that compressed air and moisture sending a tornado shaped pulse with bone shattering force at the enemy capable of creating a crater in the ground if struck from above. The funny thing about this technique is that it has the force of wind and solidness of water making it stronger than wind based techniques alone but due to this, it is clearly visible having a blue hue to it.
    Notes:
    -Usable twice or else the pressure would break his or her leg, meaning 3 max
    -Must be an ice user or have yin/yang training
    -Can still be stopped by S-rank wind or water
    -Can only be taught by Taiketsu Yagami


    ~Declined~ Same as above.

    (Meiton: Yari Narukami) Dark Release: Spear of Narukami
    Rank:A
    Type:Attack|Defend
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Description: The user releases a large amount of dark chakra from their arm and then condense it into a dark spear as long as the user. The spear is built like a staff with two huge spear like blades at both tips taking up 2/3rds of the spear itself. The spear can be used for combat to fight off enemies and can also be thrown at the target.
    Notes:
    -Last one full turn unless expeled from hands. (Thrown)
    -Usable 3 times
    -While spear is in play, the only other technique that can be used is Shield of Narukami.

    ~Approved~


    NOTE: While I've checked all the pieces of your armor, they should all have been considered independent submissions, therefore you'd be breaking the rule about 5 submissions max per week. I will let it slip this time, but don't do it again.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Quote Originally Posted by Zero Kelvin View Post
    Freestyle art circular sweeping = Furīāto wa bappon-tekina enkei
    Rank: C
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: 10 (+5 if the user is wearing sharp or hard footwear.)
    Description: A Taijutsu attack where the user stands in hand stand, and swings his/her legs in a sweeping circular kick.


    ~ All approved, but can I tell you, as an experienced RPer, that most if not all of this stuff is pretty useless in a regular battle. ~
    Furīāto: Shinrai Kaika | Freestyle Art: Blooming Confidence
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Freestyle art is a completely supplementary Taijutsu style, which is specially designed to supplement almost all forms of Taijutsu and Kenjutsu. Shinrai Kaika is one of the more defensive-based techniques in Freestyle Art. The user covers himself in a thin layer of wind and chakra. The layer is made especially to prevent electricity and lightning based techniques generally from electrocuting the user, though focused attacks will easily pierce the armor. By using Shinrai Kaika along with a Taijutsu or Kenjutsu technique, the user is able to increase his own chance of survival even if faced with an advanced counter-attack. Shinrai Kaika mainly improves the footwork and perceptive ability of the user during a Taijutsu or Kenjutsu attack. By using an advanced form of the half-step, Shinrai Kaika supplements the users footwork vastly and enables the user to avoid almost all incoming attacks, in terms of reaction-time and flexible escapes. The half-steps can also be used to supplement the offensive part of any technique, as a half-step can be used to put ones whole bodyweight behind an attack, without losing any ground, balance or flexibility. Shinrai Kaika is also an alternative meditation art that can be applied during battle. When utilizing Shinrai Kaika along with a Taijutsu or Kenjutsu technique, the user carefully controls his breathing, and with many years of experience in meditation, the user is able to activate both parts of the brain at the same time and for a few vital moments use 100% of his brain capacity. Shinrai Kaika is the ability to use all the excess brain capacity to increase the users thought processing and improve his sight drastically, slightly mimicking the Sharingan, though not being as effective. This branch of Shinrai Kaika will allow the user to track objects that would otherwise be untraceable to the naked eye. Furthermore, it allows allowing them to predict any eventual counter-attack from the slightest muscle tension in their opponents body.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -No Freestyle Art during the next turn.
    -Can only be used along with a Taijutsu or Kenjutsu technique.
    -The user cannot utilize any S-ranked or above Taijutsu techniques the turn after this has been used.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.


    Changes bolded

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ This is basically a mix between an old approved wind custom (wind armor), half step (which as been done and approved more then once as two separate customs if my memory serves me right) and the Sixth Sense.

    New submissions:

    Ōke no Erementa-Kata | The Royal Elementalist Form
    Rank: S
    Type: Defensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 40 (+10 every turn)
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The Elementalists form is one of the only purely chakra based Taijutsu forms that centers around the deflection of elemental techniques. Erementa-Kata requires in-depth understanding of the element you wish to defend against by the usage of this style and as such, if you’re not a user of that particular element, you cannot use Erementa-Kata to defend yourself from it. Erementa-Kata revolves around finding weak points in a jutsu and instead of spending huge amounts of chakra on absorbing or negating the whole technique, which would quickly tire the user out, this style revolves around destabilizing a technique by finding a weak point in it, or simply deflect it by changing its trajectory slightly. Of the two solutions, deflection is the easiest to use. By focusing great amounts of pure chakra into his hands or feet, the user is able to make a thin transparent shield of chakra; there is no limit on what form the shield can have. When a technique collides with the shield, the smooth surface and nature of the shield simply causes the technique to move along the surface of the shield. Depending on what form the shield has, the technique can be directed anywhere, though advanced techniques cannot be guided back towards their original user. Destabilization is a bit trickier and is usually used against larger scaled techniques, which cannot be directed back towards their user. By compressing pure chakra in their hand and using the rotation aspect of the Rasengan, the user is able to send a shockwave of chakra into the targeted technique. The shockwave causes a great destabilization in the opponents chakra inside the technique, which in turn causes the technique to revert back to its original, harmless form.
    -Can only be used on A-ranked or below techniques.
    -Only B-ranked or below techniques can be directed back towards their original user.
    -The turn Erementa Kata is used; the user cannot utilize the element he used Erementa-Kata on.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Hear me out, this jutsu looks good on paper and maybe even in the Narutoverse, but it simply can't be accepted for the sake of our RP. You're basically making yourself invincible to anyone who's can't use S-rank or won't use S-rank because he doesn't want to spam powerful techniques. Also, raw chakra is naturally weaker then any elemental chakra. Think about it, there are two manipulation you can do with your chakra; shape manipulation, and elemental manipulation. Hence, an elemental technique which is manipulated to take form will always be stronger then an equally ranked chakra manipulated jutsu.

    Kanjō Kyūsai | Emotional Relief
    Rank: A-S
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 30 (40 for S-ranked version)
    Damage points: 60 (80 for S-ranked version)
    Description: Kanjō Kyūsai is a technique based on the principles of killing intention and the ability to exude feelings and emotions. By focusing intensively on a strong emotion and exuding it into the immediate vicinity like normal killing intent, the user is able to induce the feeling or emotion in the target. This is merely the first stage of the technique. When the appropriate emotion or feeling has been chosen, the user focuses a large amount of pure chakra near the targets position. By compress-ing the chakra exponentially, the user causes a large amount of effects to occur. Kanjō Kyūsai gives the target a feeling of being crushed by the users chakra, it forces suicidal thoughts onto the target and induces a feeling of absolute fear and paralysis. If used correctly, Kanjō Kyūsai can give the opponent a feeling of having their very soul and life squeezed by nothing more than the users Ki. By compressing chakra near the opponent to such a level that the chakra becomes almost solid, the user is able to turn the feeling of being crushed and squeezed into reality. The compressed chakra will follow the rhythm of the exuded emotion or feeling while it crushes the target.
    -This is an extremely advanced version of Killing Intent.
    -A-ranked version can only be used tree times per battle. S-ranked can only be used twice.
    -No S-ranked or above non-elemental Ninjutsu during the next turn.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    ~Declined~ OP. You cannot force emotion into your opponent or predict how they will react. You need to create a situation and let it develop itself. Actions, reactions. Also, the restrictions are off for such a powerful technique. Lower the abilities of this technique.

    Makyo no Gyakuen | The Demonic Mirrors Edge
    Rank: S
    Type: N/A
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The Demonic Mirrors Edge is a gigantic Zanbatō. The sword has the ability as to grow to fit its master. The blade itself will always be as tall as the user and it will be just as broad and the handle will be as long as one of the users arms, from shoulder to fingertip. Makyo no Gyakuen was forged in the flames of music and determination, and as such, it will never break or shatter before its master’s life ends. The blade is sharp like nothing else and has the ability to cut through anything, except other indestructible items. The ability to cut through anything is sadly not able to save the wielder from Ninjutsu, since a thin cut in a fireball or something similar would be all but mockery. To the user, the Makyo no Gyakuen feels extremely light, but it will crash unto an enemy with the force of a thousand hits even with the slightest power behind it. Makyo no Gyakuen can only be wielded by the one it finds worthy, anyone else whom tries to use the blade will be unable to even lift it.
    -Can only be used by Zero Kelvin.


    ~Declined~ What's with those OP submissions. Ability to cut through anything? Take it off, the ability to cut is dependent on both the durability of your sword (which isn't made of diamond so it's breakable) and the strength used when cutting an object. Graphic example; if you drop your sword on the ground, will it cut through it endlessly? (This is an exaggeration to make myself clear). "Crush the enemy with the force of a thousand hits with the slightest power behind it [...]", my precedent example is still valid. While this is narutoverse, some basic physic laws still applies. Btw, your sword sounds like an transformed version of Mjolnir

    You know what to change.


    Resubmission:
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    Merodīāto Genjutsu: Kiku no Tanoshi | Melody Art Illusionary Technique: The Joy of Listening
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Kiku no Tanoshi is one of the most advanced non-Dojutsu illusionary techniques. The user plays a single tune that causes the affected to become hopelessly caught in an illusion. There will be no evidence that the affected has been placed under a Genjutsu, even methods and techniques that usually release a being from an illusion without fail will be useless against this technique. The only way to escape this technique is to inflict pain in the affected beings ears. This illusionary technique is the perfect counter-measure against affected beings who would try to block their hearing to escape the effects of Melody Art techniques. The illusion makes the affected firmly believe that they cannot hear anything, it is possible to use this Genjutsu to block out specific sounds. But even though the affected feels as if they cannot hear and even if they actually can't hear, they’re still affected by Melody Art and other sound-based techniques because of this illusion.
    -Can only be used while Merodīāto: Kyoku | Melody Art: Music is active.
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Lasts until deactivated.
    -This technique can maximally affect 5 beings. When the technique is activated the user chooses maximally 5 targets and thereafter he can only change 1 target once per turn.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    ~Declined~ A bit too much of an affection-rate. Lower it from people and limit how long it lasts.
    Merodīāto Genjutsu: Kiku no Tanoshi | Melody Art Illusionary Technique: The Joy of Listening
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Kiku no Tanoshi is one of the most advanced non-Dojutsu illusionary techniques. The user plays a single tune that causes the affected to become hopelessly caught in an illusion. There will be no evidence that the affected has been placed under a Genjutsu, even methods and techniques that usually release a being from an illusion without fail will be useless against this technique. The only way to escape this technique is to inflict pain in the affected beings ears. This illusionary technique is the perfect counter-measure against affected beings who would try to block their hearing to escape the effects of Melody Art techniques. The illusion makes the affected firmly believe that they cannot hear anything, it is possible to use this Genjutsu to block out specific sounds. But even though the affected feels as if they cannot hear and even if they actually can't hear, they’re still affected by Melody Art and other sound-based techniques because of this illusion.
    -Can only be used while Merodīāto: Kyoku | Melody Art: Music is active.
    -Can only be used once per battle.
    -Lasts for 5 turns.
    -This technique can maximally affect 3 beings. When the technique is activated the user chooses maximally 3 targets and thereafter he can only change 1 target once per turn.
    -Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    (Haoshoku Haki) ~ The Ambition of a King
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user focus solely on his spiritual force and will then increase its levels. The bigger the user's chakra pool the more effective this technique is since chakra is composed by both spiritual and physical energy.
    Opponent's with less will and spiritual force than the user will feel the pressure on their own spiritual energy and their will, will be overpowered. It will feel like the user's spiritual energy is crushing the opponent's. One can be so overwhelmed by this technique, it can be left on his knees, grasping for breath or even unconscious. On other cases, if the difference between spiritual energies is not that big, one with a lower level can be left paralysed for a few moments. Also, the closer the opponent and the user are, the more the opponent is affected. If he manages to increase their distance to long distance, the opponent simply feels a shivering and may feel intimidated.
    This technique can be used in multiple people at once. With mastery, the user can select his only targets, out of a great amount of persons, without affecting the rest.
    One rank lower: No effect.
    Two ranks lower: Target is left paralysed for a few seconds [4-6s].
    Three ranks lower: Target can be left on the ground grasping for breath [1 turn].
    Four ranks lower or more: Target can be left unconscious for a few moments [1 turn]

    Restrictions:
    • Usable three times per battle.
    • Jinchuurikis are not affected due to their large chakra pools.


    (Gengu Kinjutsu: Yajuuinai) ~ Forbidden Illusion Technique: Beast Within
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: -
    Description: This is a gengutsu made specifically to be used on a Jinchuuriki. The user will use the heightened prowess of his Sharingan to enter the opponent's subconscious (like when Sasuke did the same with Naruto and encountered the Nine Tailed Fox).
    Both the user and the opponent will continue doing whatever they're doing, because the user will only use some chakra and spiritual energy to do this technique. The spiritual technique will then materialize in his form inside the opponent's subconscious. Then the user will remove the seal which will cause the opponent's bijuu to be released. The opponent will then enter in his complete bijuu mode two turns after this technique is performed.
    This technique is considered kinjutsu because if someone cannot handle the bijuu once released, it will roam free trough the world.

    Requirements:
    • 3 Tomoe Sharingan

    Restrictions:
    • Usable once per battle
    • Can only be used in jinchuurikis


    (Gengutsu: Fuude no Bakuyaku) ~ Illusion Technique: Explosive Arm Seals
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will perform a row of three hand seals or can opt by making eye contact using the sharingan if he possesses it, in order to use this technique.
    The opponent will then be put inside a gengutsu where he will think the use has used a sealing technique and will have one of his arms covered in multiple glowing seals. The user will then taunt the opponent, saying the seals will explode and saying they are impossible to remove. Using the powers of his gengutsu, the user will make the opponent feel extremely paranoid and will feel an immense urge to cut his arm off in order to save himself, ending up doing so.

    Restrictions:
    • Usable three times per battle if used with hand seals
    • Usable two times per battle if used trough dojutsu.


    ~All Declined~ I will not accept any jutsu that use font, size change, aligned/centered text or spoilers for anything else then pictures. Re-submit in a more readable way.
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    Summoning Animal:
    Chameleon
    Scroll Owner: Alucard
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    Summoning Boss if existing: -
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: -
    General Description: Chameleons are a distinctive and highly specialized clade of lizards. They are distinguished by their parrot-like zygodactylous feet, their separately mobile and stereoscopic eyes, their very long, highly modified, and rapidly extrudable tongues, their swaying gait, the possession by many of a prehensile tail, crests or horns on their distinctively shaped heads, and the ability of some to change color. They're uniquely adapted for climbing and visual hunting.
    General Abilities: Their tongue extends out faster than human eyes can follow, at around 26 body lengths per second. The tongue hits the prey in about 30 thousandths of a second
    Chameleon's, being experts in camouflage, can turn invisible and even suppress their chakra, turning completely undetectable by chakra sensors. Also, since they're so skilled with camouflage, capable of turning the same colour of their surroundings, they're very good at performing sneaky attacks. Some have specialize in gengutsu, which in the end is quite similar with their ability to blend with the environment (deceive their enemies).
    Note: Dropping my jackal summoning contract if this gets approved.
     
         
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    Quote Originally Posted by -Liquid Cefka- View Post
    Custom Weapon: Demon Regalia
    Type Attack/Defense
    Range:Short-to Mid
    Rank: S
    Chakra:N/A
    Damage:N/A
    Description: Demon Regalia is a demonic sword given to Jinnouske by his master on his deathbed. It measure around 4 feet long, and 3 feet wide and it emmits a purple-ish black aura. It can be infused with fire chakra to extend it 3 more feet, transforming it into a flaming longsword.
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    ( レガリア Oni Regalia )-Demon Regalia
    Type: Supplementary
    Ranks: S
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The Demon Regalia is the sword given to Jinnouske by his Master on his deathbed. It measures around 4 feet long, and 2 feet wide, and emitts a purple-ish black aura around the blade. Gold design cover small regions of the swords' hilt, and in the middle-most part of the hilt lies the symbol of Oda. The origins and creation of the sword is unknown, only rumored to have been wielded by A demon king known as Nobunaga Oda, who ruled in a distant reality....Long with the swords mysterious exterior, powerful chakra lie on its interior. The chakra inside the blade alows the user to not only absorb fire natured chakra, it also allows one to mold it and shape it to their liking once absorbed.
    -Can be used throught the entirety of the battle
    -Can be used at beginning of the battle
    -Can only absorb up to C-Rank fire jutsu
    -Can only absorb Fire jutsu twice per battle
    -Can only be given by -Liquid Cefka-



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