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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Oraan Nguyen View Post
    Hyouton: Kōri no Capades (Ice Release: Black Ice Capades)
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user channels Hyouton chakra into their feet creating sharp Ice Skates made of Black Ice. When used on Ice, increases the speed of the user to that of Rock Lee without weights. As long as the skates are touching Ice, the skates will last. The moment it touches a surface/terrain made of anything other than ice, the skates will dissipate. The Ice Skates are very sharp and can be used as an effective taijutsu component.
    Note: Can only be used on an Ice surface/terrain.
    Note: After dissipating, User must wait 2 turns before each use.
    Note: Lasts for 3 turns
    Note: Can only be done 2 times per battle
    Note: Due to strain on the user's Legs, after use of the second time, user's speed drops one level by Rank. (Sage - Kage - Sannin)
    Note: Must be a minimum of Kage rank to use.
    Note: User is still trackable through normal eyesight.
    Note: Boost in speed refers to running speed, not body movement speed.

    ±± Approved ±± Added two restrictions


    Added - Turn usage and number of times per use. Increased to A Rank as well as changing Chakra and Damage to reflect proper rank.

    Hyouton: Kuroi Yuki [Ice Release: Black Snow Technique]
    Type: Attack/Supplementary/Defense
    Rank: B
    Range: All
    Chakra: 25 (+15 per turn)
    Damage: +20 to all jutsu made from Black Snow
    Description: The user, having used Ice Release: Glazed Black Ice Intrusion along with Ice Release: Ice Technique(making it snow), makes a very thicker than normal black snow fall across the entire terrain. The snow maintains the properties of Glazed Black Ice Intrusion, allowing all ice techniques made from the black snow will have the extra resistance to lightning (takes a lightning jutsu of the same rank to cancel out any jutsu made from black snow) and a +20 damage to all black ice jutsu as a result. In two turns, the ground will be completely covered in snow up to the ankles. . The user is capable of using the Black Snow to recreate/duplicate any Ice Release techniques that do no originate from inside the body of the user, by manipulating their chakra that is already inside of the Black Snow.

    Note: The user, can use this jutsu in place of creating Glazed Black Ice Intrusion and Ice Technique(to make it snow).
    Note: Counts as 2/3 moves in a turn
    Note: Other precipitation techniques (rain, snow etc) cannot be used at the same time as or used to cancel out Black Snow unless it is of a higher Rank.
    Note: Can replace any precipitation technique used of B Rank and Below, effectively replacing the previous technique in its entirety as the user's chakra will override any previous chakra used be it a technique of their ally or an opponent.
    Note: Only the user of this technique can create other jutsu out of the Black Snow.
    Note: Another Ice user can post Glazed Black Ice Intrusion to use techniques from the Black Snow.
    Note: Must be taught by Oraan Nguyen


    See Approval Here

    After having discussed things with you, I have made several changes all located in Green. I hope these changes are to your liking.



    ±± Pending ±± This is a bad technique for you. Its approvable but i don't need you to use those 2 techniques first so you can use this. You can simply use this after making it snow and i'll still approve it. Also, take out the restriction you added. Rain and Snow can fall at the same time. As well as snow and mist. or 3 at the same time. So, your technique wouldn't actually overcome others. Also, take the +20 damage. I'd give you at most +10 although i think the lightning resistance is quite the bonus on its own.Make it count as one technique. No need to over restrict. Its almost there ^



    Hyouton: Kuroi Yuki Hyō [Ice Release: Black Snow Leopard]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: the user, after having created black snow, forms 3 handseals and creates a large 10 foot tall leopard out of the black snow. The Black Snow Leopard is only capable of being formed on an area that has black snow already on it. The leopard, is incredibly fast, and stands at 5 feet when on all fours and is capable of taking Fire and Lightning Damage up to A Rank without melting. A Rank Fire and Lightning will damage the Black Snow Leopard, however it is capable of reforming 1 turn later as long as Black Snow Technique is still in play. S Ranked Fire or Lightning completely destroys the Black Snow Leopard. This is normally used when a quick attack is needed to unsettle an opponent, causing them to focus more on the leopard than the user from its Raw Speed. The Leopard moves at the speed of Rock Lee without Weights as long as it remains running on Black Snow. When not on black snow, the Leopard runs at the speed equivalent to that of a normal Leopard.
    Note: Can only be used 2x per battle.
    Note: Can only reform if Fire or Lightning (A Rank and below) hit the Leopard but are not enough to destroy it.
    Note: Can only be used after Ice Release: Black Snow Technique
    Note: Due to being formed of Glazed Black Ice Intrusion, Black Snow Leopard retains the Lightning Resistance of the technique and +20 damage.
    Note: Must be taught by Oraan Nguyen



    ±± Declined ±± Well...now its a bit too much...this leopard automatically has more power than an S-Rank ice as it will always be a S-Rank +20. No. Also, rock lee without weights but make it so its still trackable by normal eyesight. Also, you need to specificy how many turns it LASTs. Maximum of 2 for all its bonus.
    Resubmitting

    Hyouton: Kuroi Yuki [Ice Release: Black Snow Technique]
    Type: Attack/Supplementary/Defense
    Rank: B
    Range: All
    Chakra: 25 (+15 per turn)
    Damage: +10 to all jutsu made from Black Snow
    Description: This technique is formed as a result of the user having used Ice Release: Glazed Black Ice Intrusion followed by Ice Release: Ice Technique(making it snow). As Glazed Black Ice Intrusion is a technique requires no handseal and that triggers itself upon sensing Ice or Earth Chakra of the user and manipulating it, Glazed Black Ice Intrusion can only be sensed by Doujutsu users and is triggered with the usage of an Ice or Earth technique, then followed up by Ice Release: Ice Technique that also requires no handseals, makes a very thicker than normal black snow fall across the entire terrain. The snow maintains the properties of Glazed Black Ice Intrusion, allowing all ice techniques made from the black snow have the extra resistance to lightning (takes a lightning jutsu of the same rank to cancel out any jutsu made from black snow) and a +10 damage to all black ice jutsu as a result, losing some of its damage from the former technique. In two turns, the ground will be completely covered in snow up to the ankles. . The user is capable of using the Black Snow to recreate/duplicate any Ice Release techniques that do no originate from inside the body of the user, by manipulating their chakra that is already inside of the Black Snow.
    Note: The user, can use this jutsu in place of creating Glazed Black Ice Intrusion and Ice Technique(to make it snow).
    Note: Other precipitation techniques (rain, snow etc) cannot be used at the same time as or used to cancel out Black Snow unless it is of a higher Rank.
    Note: Only the user of this technique can create other jutsu out of the Black Snow.
    Note: Another Ice user can post Glazed Black Ice Intrusion to use techniques from the Black Snow.
    Note: Must be taught by Oraan Nguyen

    - Took out the Precipitation part like you suggested.
    - Took out 2/3 turns part like you suggested.
    - I FINALLY understand what you are talking about. I had to go and read Typhoon Vortex and Wind and Fire Blast to understand what I was doing wrong. In the description previous to this one, I had placed "having used tech1 with 2 two, the user can....", when what I should have put is "this is formed as a result of the user using tech1 immediately after tech2". Sorry for my incompetence.

    ±± Approved ±± Well done!


    Hyouton: Kuroi Yuki Hyō [Ice Release: Black Snow Leopard]
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60 (+10 due to being formed Black Snow)
    Description: the user, after having created black snow, forms 3 handseals and creates a large 10 foot tall leopard out of the black snow. The Black Snow Leopard is only capable of being formed on an area that has black snow already on it. The leopard, is incredibly fast, and stands at 5 feet when on all fours and is capable of taking Fire and Lightning Damage up to A Rank without melting. A Rank Fire and Lightning will damage the Black Snow Leopard, however it is capable of reforming 1 turn later as long as Black Snow Technique is still in play. S Ranked Fire or Lightning completely destroys the Black Snow Leopard. This is normally used when a quick attack is needed to unsettle an opponent, causing them to focus more on the leopard than the user from its Raw Speed. The Leopard moves at the speed of Rock Lee without weights as long as it remains running on Black Snow. When not on black snow, the Leopard runs at the speed equivalent to that of a normal leopard.
    Note: Can only be used 2x per battle.
    Note: Can only reform if Fire or Lightning (A Rank and below) hit the Leopard but are not enough to destroy it.
    Note: Can only be used after Ice Release: Black Snow Technique
    Note: Due to being formed of Black Snow, retains the Lightning Resistance of the technique and +10 damage.
    Note: The Leopard, due to its sheer size, is still trackable by normal eyesight when running at Rock Lee Speed.

    Note: reforming counts as one move.
    Note: Must be taught by Oraan Nguyen

    ±± Approved ±±


    NEW

    Hyouton: Kuro Kōri Wa Mitomeru [Ice Release: Black Ice Admission]Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 0
    Description: User does 4 handseals and inserts his Hyouton chakra into the body of up to 2 people. The chosen people are allowed to enter and exit Demonic Ice Mirrors the same way the user can as long as the user is alive. This technique can only be detected by doujutsu users.
    Note: The people chosen are limited to Earth/Lightning/Fire jutsu when traveling from one mirror to the next or else it will interfere with the user's chakra.
    Note: User is capable of using Earth/Lightning/Fire jutsu only when traveling between mirrors.
    Note: The User inserting his chakra into these people can also be used as a way to help escape S Ranked and below Genjutsu.
    Note: Can only be used 3X per battle.
    Note: User must wait 2 turns to use again.
    Note: If used 3x in a battle, user cannot transport through any mirrors for the remainder of the battle
    Note: If put into 1 person, counts as 1/3 jutsu. If in 2 people, counts as 2/3 jutsu.


    ±± Declined ±± The genjutsu part...no no. The Earth, lightning, fire things is actually the opposite. If its Ice, you'd be only able to use Water and Wind otherwise you'd unlabance your chakra and disturb the technique. Also, the same applies to your targets.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-26-2012 at 02:05 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Genjutsu: Damudo no Koe) - Illusionary Technique: Voices of the Damned
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: -
    Description:
    • Once the user is quite close to the target, more notably their ear, they will take in a deep breath, and breathe out. This breath is infused with chakra, which upon reaching the ears parses through the drum and into the canals, messing with the target's chakra causing distortion to them, making them feel dizzy and off-balance. From this the target feels like their sight is being distorted and they can't see things straight. The closer the user is to the target's ear, the more effective the illusion is to them.
    Notes:
    • Can only be performed 4 times a battle.
    • This can only be performed when the user is really close to the target.
    • Because the chakra is inserted through the ear, it's considered to be sound-based.

    ±± Declined ±± If you want it to affect the vision you need to make changes in the description. Also, add that it requires at least 2 hand seals.
    (Genjutsu: Damudo no Koe) - Illusionary Technique: Voices of the Damned
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: -
    Description:
    The user will perform two hand seals (Dog → Ram). Once the user is quite close to the target, more notably their ear, they will take in a deep breath, and breathe out. This breath is infused with chakra, which upon reaching the ears parses through the drum and into the canals, messing with the target's chakra causing distortion to them, making them feel dizzy and off-balance. From this the target feels like they had been spinning around for a while, and felt dizzy from that. The closer the user is to the target's ear, the more effective the illusion is to them.
    Notes:
    • Can only be performed 4 times a battle.
    • This can only be performed when the user is really close to the target.

    ±± Approved ±±


    The part mentioning that their sight is distorted is simply elaborating on how you would feel from being dizzy.


    Quote Originally Posted by Alternative View Post
    (Bifū Tōfū) - Doll Fatality
    • This is a fighting style used primarily by puppet users. The style is based on the theory that Dolls have a mind of their own, or having somewhat of a personality. The puppeteer trains day and night to be able to synchronize with their puppets, being able to momentarily control them without the need for puppet strings. The art of Bifū Tōfū is a puppet style of fighting where the user cuts off the puppet strings to perform moves which one generally couldn't perform with the use of puppet strings. This mostly includes random acts which can be partially controlled such as spinning at high speeds, and wild flailing of limbs and so on. This is mostly used as a Taijutsu/Kenjutsu style for usage with puppets, so getting them close-range with the target is ideal for these techniques. This is a highly advanced fighting style for puppeteers, so mastery over standard puppetry is required beforehand.

    ±± Declined ±± I won't allow you to manipulate your puppets without chakra strings.
    (Bifū Tōfū) - Doll Fatality
    • This is a fighting style used primarily by puppet users. The style is based on the theory that Dolls have a mind of their own, or having somewhat of a personality. The puppeteer trains day and night to be able to synchronize with their puppets, being able to momentarily control them without the need for puppet strings. The user doesn't technically control the puppet without the strings, but beforehand using momentum to utilize moves which wouldn't require them. If you were controlling the puppet to spin at a fast pace, you could retract the puppet strings backwards, giving the puppet a spinning motion and then reconnecting the strings to regain control over it. The art of Bifū Tōfū is a puppet style of fighting where the user cuts off the puppet strings to perform moves which one generally couldn't perform with the use of puppet strings. This mostly includes random acts which can be partially controlled such as spinning at high speeds, and wild flailing of limbs and so on. This is mostly used as a Taijutsu/Kenjutsu style for usage with puppets, so getting them close-range with the target is ideal for these techniques. This is a highly advanced fighting style for puppeteers, so mastery over standard puppetry is required beforehand.

    ±± Pending ±± Do you want to make this into a patented Hand to Hand and weapon style? If so, you need to submit it in the new CFS thread. However, this to me seems more like a technique but it can go both ways. If not, this will bare little value as a "style".


    Quote Originally Posted by Alternative View Post
    Biyorigō
    Rank: S
    Type: Puppet
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: -
    Description:
    • Biyorigō is a puppet which is based on an ancient build of puppetry, and was created by a man called Shikizaki Kiki. He preferred to instead call his puppet a doll, as it would maintain somewhat of a personality when fighting. Biyorigō is also considered to be a sword itself. It was originally built to guard him whenever he was working, and it could defend from intruders flawlessly. Somehow it fell into the hands of a puppeteer, who has learnt to master how to use the Biyorigō and how it works. The doll's design is based on Chinese culture, a woman with a golden comb in her hair, and buns. It wears a standard kimono, and is built with four arms, two hidden inside the kimono. In each hand the doll holds a lengthy sword, a broadsword almost, but not quite. It's also got four legs, which are quite sturdy and are said to be as hard as diamond, but there's no confirmation on this fact. They're able to extend out like a cross and used for blunt force attacks. Within it's hair hides 8 small daggers, four on each side similar to a retractable knife. It also carries a small blade in it's mouth, seeped in poison. The puppet's entire body is able to move around, with all sorts of joints capable of spinning, twirling and other assorted movements. Biyorigō is the first doll to ever have been able to master the Doll Fatality style. Upon all these abilities, Biyorigō is capable of using all basic puppetry techniques. The doll is kept in a big scroll which has the Kanji (人形) written on it, meaning Doll.
    Notes:
    • Mastery over Puppetry is required to use the Biyorigō.
    • Can only be used by Alternative and those whom he allows.

    Looks like this:


    (Note to mods: It doesn't get any moves auto unless it's freeform, I'll be developing jutsu for this puppet)


    ±± Declined ±± Poison requires you to have one of two things: A cannon bio with poison OR medical training. In the case of puppets it would require you to have a Sasori bio.
    Biyorigō
    Rank: S
    Type: Puppet
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: -
    Description:
    • Biyorigō is a puppet which is based on an ancient build of puppetry, and was created by a man called Shikizaki Kiki. He preferred to instead call his puppet a doll, as it would maintain somewhat of a personality when fighting. Biyorigō is also considered to be a sword itself. It was originally built to guard him whenever he was working, and it could defend from intruders flawlessly. Somehow it fell into the hands of a puppeteer, who has learnt to master how to use the Biyorigō and how it works. The doll's design is based on Chinese culture, a woman with a golden comb in her hair, and buns. It wears a standard kimono, and is built with four arms, two hidden inside the kimono. In each hand the doll holds a lengthy sword, a broadsword almost, but not quite. It's also got four legs, which are quite sturdy and are said to be as hard as diamond, but there's no confirmation on this fact. They're able to extend out like a cross and used for blunt force attacks. Within it's hair hides 8 small daggers, four on each side similar to a retractable knife. It also carries a small blade in it's mouth. The puppet's entire body is able to move around, with all sorts of joints capable of spinning, twirling and other assorted movements. Biyorigō is the first doll to ever have been able to master the Doll Fatality style. Upon all these abilities, Biyorigō is capable of using all basic puppetry techniques. The doll is kept in a big scroll which has the Kanji (人形) written on it, meaning Doll.
    Notes:
    • Mastery over Puppetry is required to use the Biyorigō.
    • Can only be used by Alternative and those whom he allows.

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    Removed the part about the dagger being seeped in poison, although some canon puppet techniques allow the use of poison, so this would give the impression that all puppets can use a basic poison.


    ±± Approved ±± Poison is iffy but taking into account its something you learn at the medschool its restricted.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by BluePhenix View Post
    @ review:
    • The spectral form is only a description of its appearance, not its actual form.
    • About its indestructibility, most weapons submitted nowadays seems to have this ability, so I said why not to myself :shrug: it's just to make sure that it will last more than one match and nobody will come claiming they destroy it... I see it a lot on most weapons being submitted, i.e. either people claim their weapon can cut through anything or is strong enough to endure anything... so I did it too.
    • About the non-conductibility to opponents chakras such as lightning and fire and cold, I already explained it... it's because the chain is already imbued with my own chakra.
    • I also mentioned that the ways I will use it will be submitted as separate submissions, so I believe there is no real need for restrictions at this stage, although I did add some by saying that it's wielders must be at least kage rank, and that activating the chain counts as a move that can only be done after a fight has started.


    Hope it's clear and fine now.

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    Resubmitting

    (Arkana Chein) – Arkana Chain
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40 for activating Arkana
    Damage points: Vary with the techniques used (Separate submissions)

    Description:
    Arkana is an indestructible chain which became legendary when it was used ages ago to capture a bijuu. When it was being forged, it was enhanced with highly advanced fuuinjutsu in order to make it able to restrain anything, whether its constitution is tangible like living beings, or intangible like chakra.

    Many fought over the power of Arkana and it was therefore kept hidden for decades, until recently when it has been finally passed down for combat. When in dormant status, Arkana is wrapped around its wielder’s left arm without affecting his/her mobility. The wielder can use it to block attacks from edged weapons, whether or not these are enhanced by wind or lightning chakra.

    In active mode, Arkana will adopt a somewhat spectral form by glowing, and the wielder will be able to use his chakra to manipulate it around, making it crawl in mid-air in order to reach and pierce through opponents and concrete techniques with its edged end. The wielder can also imbue it with chakra to make it increase in length, similarly to Shun’s Andromeda Chain in Saint Seiya. Lastly, when in active mode, Arkana is constantly imbued with the wielder's chakra, which makes it impossible for the opponent to conduct electricity, heat or cold through it by using his lightning, fire or ice chakras.

    Note: The wielder of Arkana must be Kage rank or above.
    Note: Activating Arkana counts as a move and must be done during battle.
    Note: Arkana can only be wielded by BluePhenix and those he lends it to.

    ±± Declined ±± =_= I didn't ask you to explain it to me. I asked you to restrict it and determine what can stop it, thus giving some kind of rank to it. As for the only resctrition you have its completely useless for the use of the weapon. I mean, how does it restrict its abilities being only usable by kage ranks and above?
    Similarly to any other weapons, this one too can be blocked by a sturdy enough object and/or repelled with a jutsu. Being indestructible doesn’t make it unstoppable, it is the power and technique applied into it by the user that determines how powerful it becomes, or unstoppable if you prefer, and gives it a rank. Right now it is just a tool, an inanimated object, and how I use it will be submitted separately with restrictions that I will diligently apply. I intend to submit at least one S-rank jutsu that makes use of this weapon and this is why it is currently ranked as S-rank. Well this was how I planned to do things and the reason for the lack of strict restrictions at this weapon’s current stage; it was was all based on what I learned from previous mods’ reviews. But anyway, I will henceforth adapt to your review logic.

    To begin with, the only reason I made the weapon indestructible was because I always thought making weapons this way was for the purpose of not having to replace them after every few battles, and that it could indirectly serve to decrease the mod’s workload. It is edited and bolded now, along with the other restrictions requested, which I hope will suffice. Lastly, about the restriction on the user’s rank, it is to limit the amount of people that may ask me to lend it, therefore avoiding it being spammed in battles. Since it is for personal reasons, I can remove it if you still want me to.

    Sorry for the long post, I just needed to explain how I saw things and how I see them now.

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    (Arkana Chein) – Arkana Chain
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 40 for activating Arkana
    Damage points: Vary with the techniques used (Separate submissions)

    Description:
    Arkana is an indestructible chain which became legendary when it was used ages ago to capture a bijuu. When it was being forged, it was enhanced with highly advanced fuuinjutsu in order to make it able to restrain anything, whether its constitution is tangible like living beings, or intangible like chakra.

    Many fought over the power of Arkana and it was therefore kept hidden for decades, until recently when it has been finally passed down for combat. When in dormant status, Arkana is wrapped around its wielder’s left arm without affecting his/her mobility. The wielder can use it to block attacks from edged weapons, whether or not these are enhanced by wind or lightning chakra.

    In active mode, Arkana will adopt a somewhat spectral appearance by glowing, and the wielder will be able to use his chakra to manipulate it around, making it crawl in mid-air in order to reach and pierce through opponents and concrete techniques with its edged end. The wielder can also imbue it with chakra to make it increase in length, similarly to Shun’s Andromeda Chain in Saint Seiya. Lastly, when in active mode, Arkana is constantly imbued with the wielder's chakra, which makes it impossible for the opponent to conduct electricity, heat or cold through it by using his lightning, fire or ice chakras.

    Note: Arkana can only be wielded by BluePhenix and those he lends it to.
    Note: The wielder of Arkana must be Kage rank or above.
    Note: Activating Arkana must be done during battle, with a limit of three activations per battles and each activation can only last for three turns.
    Note: After each activation, Arkana requires a regeneration period of one turn before it can be activated again. This period is also when it is most vulnerable, meaning that if the opponent successfully connects even an A-rank attack, he can damage Arkana.
    Note: Arkana can only deal with two consecutive S-rank attacks and will be damaged if used to deal with three consecutive S-rank attacks.


    ±± Declined ±± Look at the parts i put in red. The way its worded means that if i approve it you can without any technique use your chakra to make it restrict a target and make it impossible for him to defend himself without Space time techniques. The problem isn't future techniques that take use of its abilities...its the abilities you are already describing. You can do a weapon in 2 ways: either you explain in the description what the weapon is and how it works, while submitting its abilities separate. Or you put everything within the weapon. The way you are doing is having both. And i can't approve that description the way it is. Sorry. It has too many things that makes it possible to be misused.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    [Katon : Nenshou Kyuutais] - Fire Release : Burning Orbs
    Type: Attack - Offensive - Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user gathers a decent amount of fire chakra and focus into his chakra flowing system making him able to control his chakra that is spreading all over the user's body gathering all of them into his hands as the second that he chakra gets channeled the user aims his hands towards his opponent releasing all of the chakra that is in his hands creating 2 enormous orbs made of fire every orb has the half size of Gamabunta in the right and the left of the opponent and whenever the user wants he hit the user from right and left at the same time burning the user
    ♦ The orbs works the same work as The mountain smash as it hits the user from the same sizes
    ♦ Must master Fire release
    ♦ Must be taught by -Kamishiro-
    ♦ Can only be used 2 times per battles
    ♦ Can't use any fire technique at the same turn
    ♦ Can't use any fire technique above B rank in the next turn


    ±± Declined ±± OP. Badly worded. Has been done before. Underrestricted.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal: Octopuses
    Scroll Owner: ~Johninto Uchiha~
    Other Users who have signed contract: None
    Summoning Boss if existing: None (Will make later)
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Will make later


    ±± Declined ±± contract was already submitted.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Quote Originally Posted by Dr. House View Post

    (Jūho 64 tsuki ) – Gentle 64 Pokes
    Rank: S
    Type: Defense/Offense
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The hyuuga master had battled a lot of fighters, but had a tough time with battling guys who used armors which isn't solid like Earth. He had learned to have a constant swirling chakra exertion around both of his fingers, in order to evade any kind a damage that the enemies armor might have. This technique will work best on a non-solid armor (solid armors are like steel/earth) For an example, as the enemy has brought up a fire armor onto themselves, as the hyuuga approaches him, the hyuuga master will keep a swirling chakra exerted from the top of his finger, which will protect his fingers(meaning the chakra which is exerted from the tip of the finger will disturb/nullify the intended point/area where the hyuuga member will strike) or fist from any kind of burning, or whatever may expose it. Like I said, this technique works best if it isn't used against solid armors like steel or earth, or any solid based armor. As the hyuuga has gone through this defense, the hyuuga master then eject his chakra 64 times, causing disruption, as tendon/join/muscle cell injuries within the enemie's chakra system/body. The chakra swirling around the user's finger, thus reaching onto his fist, will keep away any danger from the enemy's armor like burning/cutting, or any kind a effects. Tip of the fingers contain the most powerful chakra, as where it is exerted, thus as it advances/swirls towards the arms, it decreases. If the user is poking through a not solid forbidden armor, he will take -30 damage, thus making this technique unusable for the rest of the battle.
    Note:
    ~The technique works best, if it isn't used against solid.
    ~Can be taught by Dr. House
    ~Doujutsu may see the swirling chakra around the fingers
    ~Can be used 4x

    ±± Declined ±± Good idea but, it lacks restrictions. Also, don't forget, raw chakra (like the one used for gentle fist) is always weaker (one rank) than elemental chakra. Also, when you say armor, you mean techniques that cover your enemies body right? Like Nagashi? you might want to explain that better, as armor is basically talking about weapons. Also, even if you made this into a forbidden rank it would be only able to affect s-rank elemental jutsu. Don't forget also, that this only allows you to protect your fingers (7-10cms) and most techniques like the ones you wish to counter are much thicker than that.
    (Jūho 64 tsuki ) – Gentle 64 Pokes
    Rank: S
    Type: Defense/Offense
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The hyuuga master had battled a lot of fighters, but had a tough time with battling guys who used armors which isn't solid like Earth. He had learned to have a constant swirling chakra exertion around both of his fingers, in order to evade any kind a damage that the enemies armor might have. This technique will work best on a non-solid chakra armor like if the enemy has covered himself in fire/wind/lightning/water, and Nagashi for example. For an example, as the enemy has brought up a fire armor onto themselves, as the hyuuga approaches him, the hyuuga master will keep a wide swirling chakra exerted from the top of his fingers, which will protect his fingers(meaning the chakra which is exerted from the tip of the finger will disturb/nullify the intended point/area where the hyuuga member will strike) and most of his body from any kind of burning, electricity or whatever may expose it. Like I said, this technique works best if it isn't used against solid chakra armors like steel or earth, or any solid based chakra armor. As the hyuuga has gone through this defense, the hyuuga master then eject his chakra 64 times, causing disruption, as tendon/join/muscle cell injuries within the enemie's chakra system/body. The wide swirling chakra around the user's finger, thus the swirling chakra will be protecting from most of the exposure of the opponent's chakra armor, thus will keep away any danger from the enemy's chakra armor like burning/cutting, or any kind a effects. Tip of the fingers contain the most powerful chakra, and it is the most weakest at the end of its swirls. The swirling of the chakra from the exertion of chakra from the fingers are thick and strong enough to protect the user, in order to be able to poke through jutsus like Nagashi, without taking any harm that could influence the user's future performance. If the user is poking through a not solid forbidden chakra armor, he will take -30 damage, thus making this technique unusable for the rest of the battle.
    Note:
    ~The technique works best, if it isn't used against solid.
    ~Can be taught by Dr. House
    ~Doujutsu may see the swirling chakra around the fingers
    ~Can be used 4x
    ~Due to the chakra usage, you can't use S-ranked or above Gentle Fist For the same turn.

    Note for the checker:
    I added this for a restriction:
    ~Due to the chakra usage, you can't use S-ranked or above Gentle Fist For the same turn.
    I added this for description:
    ~I've added that "chakra" armor like you said it
    ~and this to explain that this jutsu isn't just defending the fingers. "The wide swirling chakra around the user's finger, thus the swirling chakra will be protecting from most of the exposure of the opponent's chakra armor, thus will keep away any danger from the enemy's chakra armor like burning/cutting, or any kind a effects. Tip of the fingers contain the most powerful chakra, and it is the most weakest at the end of its swirls. The swirling of the chakra from the exertion of chakra from the fingers are thick and strong enough to protect the user, in order to be able to poke through jutsus like Nagashi, without taking any harm that could influence the user's future performance."

    ±± Declined ±± Creating a swirl of chakra around your fingers won't in any way protect your whole body. It may enable you to poke through an enemy technique one rank lower but you can't in any way protect your whole body. Also, how many strikes can you do with this technique? The way its worded now you'll only be able to do one. You complicated something that is very simple "The user creates a dense swirl of chakra around his main two fingers (index and middle) and uses it like a localized drill that he can use to breach through low rank armor and elemental-armor like techniques such as Earth Spear." You keep adding things on it that keeps making it impossible to be accepted.


    New Jutsus:

    (Hakke Anzen'na ji) – 8 Trigrams Safe Ground
    Rank: A
    Type: Defense/Offense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: As we know the hyuuga's are famous for disturbing the chakra flow of one's body, in this Gentle Fist technique, the Gentle Fist Master will transfer their chakra into the ground or water. As the user had transferred their chakra underneath their opponent, a small invisible chakra will arise under the opponent's feet, the opponent must be on the ground. This technique is effective within 5 meter radius where the opponent is in the middle. As the chakra entered the opponents body from the ground or water, it will hit all the tenketsu points in the opponent's feet and thighs. As their circulation of the chakra, and the tenketsu points has been disturbed. This either causes the opponent to either fail to mold the chakra for the intended technique, or to overdo it meaning the technique of the opponent will damage the opponent as by having too much of what is needed. This won't cause any damage to the opponent, only the feeling of numbness in their feet as they're use to have the chakra circulation but now it is been disturbed, and to fail to do any chakra based techniques which involves the legs.
    Notes:
    ~Can be used 4x
    ~The user can't be mid-air
    ~Due to the chakra usage, you can't use S-ranked or above Gentle Fist For the same turn.
    ~Can be taught by Dr. House

    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. The notion is both OP and away from what gentle fist is.


    (Kurōjingu· Geitsu no yashinoki ) – Palms of The Closing Gates
    Rank: S
    Type: Defense/Offense
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This jutsu has been passed down from generation to generations, in order to stop wars within the families or even within a village. This technique involves the user's high speed movements of the exerting chakra from their palms, but this chakra is very different. As the user has brought their hands back to his sides, he will move it forward and backwards, while exerting a chakra from his palms. This movement is really fast, thus naked eye would not be able to see the hands moving, only that they're by the side of the user. As because of the high speeds of the exertion of chakra, this chakra will cover a really wide area, thus making it almost unavoidable. The chakra which the user is exerting is invisible to the naked eye. As this chakra has reached the opponent's body, it will close their chakra points, their tenketsu.
    Note:
    ~Due to the chakra usage, you can't use S-ranked or above Gentle Fist For the same turn.
    ~Can be used 4x
    ~Must be taught by Dr. House
    ~Must know Gentle Fist


    ±± Declined ±± Similar techniques already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Akenomyōsei)The Morning Star
    Rank:S
    Damage:N/A
    Type:Weapon
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:40 for abilities
    Description: The Morning Star is a legendary silvery snow white Fuuma Shuriken made of a lightweight yet immensly strong metal. It can be thrown with immense dexterity and accuracy and due to its light-weight build and heightened equilibrium the Fuuma Shuriken rotates at high speeds when thrown, easily reaching 400 rotations per minute and while traveling at immense speeds. Its blades are tapered to extremely sharp edges being able to slice through rocks with a level of grace beauty and strength unmatched by any sword. When traveling, because of its pure colour, it often reflects the suns rays making the blade dazzle with the colours of the rainbow, however because of its high rotation levels and speed of travel, it is often seen as a bright whitish light that can blind the enemy if they were to look directly at the blade, earning it the name of The Monring Star.

    The Morning Stars four blades are easily detachable and can be wielded like daggers if neccesary for close combat. Legend has it that upon creation, while being forged each each of the four blades were pre-infused with a element one wind; water; fire; and lightning. This allows the user to add basic chakra to the blades yet still produce the same effects as if they added elemental chakra.

    The Morning Star comes with a silver chain that can easily be wrapped around and unwrapped from the inner rings of the blades allowing the user to control the Fuuma Shuriken mid flight through use of the chain, or use the chain in conjunction with a single one of its blades creating a sword-chain effect. The chain itself was also forged with its own abilities, being that the chain can be legnthened or shortened upon the users will, and can also be hardened and stiffened to the point that it can be mistaken for a rigid iron bar, this makes the Morning Star set very versatile and allows it to be used in ingunuitive and imaginative ways.

    For example the user could attach both ends of the chain to a seperate detached blade and harden the chain, forming a Naginta like weapon or the user could activate two or more of the Morning Stars elements at the same time,for example throwing the Morning Star while activating the Fire and Wind blades through the use of basic chakra, so that while the Fuuma Shuriken is rotating the chakra will coat the blades forming a coating that has both heightened cutting abilities and the ability to burn and scald. The blades of the Fuuma Shuriken are usualy all aligned with the chain wrapped around the blades and the wielders shoulder for easy carrying.

    When one or more of the Morning Stars Element blades are activated, the element will manifest around the the blade however it will have a white or silverish tint. Such as White lightning crackling around the blades, a Silvery water coating and so on. The blade will also be able to cut through B rank and below techniques when a element is coating the blade, taking into considerations of the elements strengths and weaknesses of course EG. Lightning Coated Morning Star can cut through A rank earth but only C rank Wind.

    ~For the Fuuma Shurken to be thrown, all Four blades must be attached and intact otherwise the shurikens equilibrium will be put off, and it will not be able to travel properly.
    ~Once thrown, the Shuriken has to be retrivied by physical means such as throwing it so that it loops around much like a boomerang, or via the use of the chain.
    ~Making the Chain rigid counts as a move. Chain can only be destroyed by S rank piercing and cutting techniques. Blades are Indestructible.
    ~The user cannot activate elements that are at the opposite spectrum to eachother at the same time, such as water and fire.


    ±± Declined ±± I like the originality of the idea and the weapon itself. However, you need to simply this a bit and the chain part is quite the mess. Be it a separate chain you can attach to each blade would be best. Controlling the shuriken through a chain isn't very possible or viable. as for the infusing with elements, since your weapon is so unique and interesting i'll allow it but you need to make it more clear what each of it means. And also, lets kept it at 2 elements at the same time max.


    Quote Originally Posted by -Scaze- View Post
    Mantis Fist

    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike . While striking the enemy the user focus's a fair amount of raiton chakra on the tops of their fingers and then aims to strike the enemies nervous points. While striking the nervous points the user forcefully inserts their ration chakra into that point allowing them to disrupt the enemies: Synapses;Cause breakdown of Neurons;Disrupt signal relays,Redirect Signals;Stimulate Sensory neurons
    By disrupting the synapses ,one can cause the enemies reactions to either slow or speed up to their liking
    By breaking down the Neurons one can cause the enemies reaction to halt altogether
    By disrupting and redirecting signal relays,one could make the opponents movements get mixed up eg. The opponents brain says it wants to make five handseals,while relaying the information from the brain to the hands a diversion caused by The Mantis Fist occurs causing the opponent to move say his legs instead.
    By stimulating sensory neurons one could make the enemy feel as if he was under immense pain much like a genjustu.
    The effects of the Mantis Fist greatly resembles,is similar or if not is a genjustu.It revolves around the hypothesis that if a person can no longer feel pain due to their nervous system acting as it shouldn't,demonstrated in movies;books and manga,such as Kick Ass;Brisinger and One Piece.Then why shouldnt someone be put under great pain without the need for a large impact by their Nervous system/Sensory Neurons being manipulated
    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.

    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's

    Mantis Fist Four Strikes
    Rank:A
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Range:Contact
    Description: The user chaneles their ration chakra and strikes at the users chest in a rapid rigid like motion four times aiming for the Medial and Latoral Pectoral nerves and the Supraclavicular nerves(All being located in the upper chest). The user strikes with their index and middle fingers striking first at the medial nerve with their left hand then at the first supraclavicular nerve with their right hand,then at the lactoral nerve with their left hand and lastly the second supraclavicular nerve with their right hand.With each strike the user extends their needle-like focused raiton chakra into the opponent sinking their raiton chakra deep into the opponent so that it can pass through their skin muscle and if need be bones to reach the nerves, once this is done the enemy will start to experience great pain similar to that if someone were to be under cardiac arrest since when the raiton chakra is being inserted the chakra first strikes the recpetive nerves present in the skin in that small area manipulating them to send the signals for pain and signals to the motor neurons to make the chest muscles clench.It then continues to let their chakra seep further in to get to the actual nerveous system causing the chest muscles to clench further.This justu causes the opponent to become Nauseaus,also the opponent will be unable to use any justu's that require exhaling for that turn due to the involuntary clenching of their chest.
    ~Can only be used 2x
    ~No Mantis fist Justu for the next Turn
    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist


    ±± Pending ±± the idea isn't bad however, the way its worded, the way it works, the description of move you submitted, etc all have problems. First this is very closely related to medical training thus its unapprovable. Also, the genjutsu part was already done...by me. Lazy Fist is Gentaijutsu, the ability to through touch, insert chakra into your opponent to produce pinpoint genjutsu-effects. Also, the way its worded in both the description of the technique and the style itself, it makes it closely related to Gentle Fist. It needs work but its on the good way for something cool.

    Mantis Fist

    The Mantis Fist is a taijustu style that invovles the user striking the enemy with one or more of their fingers in rapid succesion in specific places alternating between hands for each strike . While striking the enemy, the user focus's a large amount of Raiton or Katon chakra on the tops of their fingers and when they strike the enemy, they allow the chakra to penetrate into the enemies body, however even though it is a very pinpoint strike done with the finger tips, its effects are devestating as when the user makes contact with the opponent, they insert their chakra into the opponents body, the chakra ripples outwards and in the direction of the original strike, much like when a pebble is dropped into a shallow pond and the water around it is disturbed and ripples outwards. The effects of the Mantis Fist can be increased further by striking certain spots on the body, such as pressure points or nerve endings.
    When this is done with raiton chakra, the chakra will ripple outwards on impact, which may affect motor and sensory neurons with its static charges, this can cause:
    -Paralysation in the surronding area.
    -Loss of feeling and pain in that area. The users raiton chakra's static charges are used to counter the static charges of the opponents sensory neurons, making the opponent have a loss of feeling and pain in that area, this proves disadvantageous, as damage can be done to the opponents body without the opponent ever being aware of the effects caused(Broken ribs pierced lungs ect.)

    By using fire chakra you can cause hea****er present in bodies or the atmosphere causing the water to evapourate, this can be very effective as the body is made up of large sums of water and many organs rely on water present in the body.


    The Mantis Fist has one last ability, because of the way that the chakra is released and inserted, the non physical chakra part of the Mantis Fist does not require contact with the opponents body to work. Infact once the ripple effect is released, it can travel through mediums such as earth water and air for up to 5 inches the ripples becoming wider and affecting a larger area as it reaches further from the source, much like a wave that passess through a small gap into a large area. The area covered having a diameter of 6 inches per 1 inch distance form the source.

    This style of fighting is called mantis fist,since it mostly involves striking your opponent with the tip of your finger(s) in rapid succesion,and since mantis have scythe like fingers instead of hands and move in rapid ridigid jerky like motions i thought the name was befitting.
    The Mantis fist contains stances that are strange and unusual,and usualy unprecidented to the enemy,making a mantis fist users movements hard to read.

    Note:Anyone other than -Scaze- must be taught to use the mantis fist justu's


    ~Requires the user to have mastered Taijustu/strong fist and started Raiton training
    ~Anyone other than -Scaze- must be Taught the Mantis Fist


    ±± Pending ±± CFS thread.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (sabaku tsutsu)- Desert Gun
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive, Supplementary, Defence
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The User turns their arm into sand by using chakra, the tissues are transformed into sand at the cellular level.The user forms a finger gun and fires sand in the shape of small cylinder at high speeds with tremendous force from their index finger at the intended target, which is strong enough to pierce through a rock clone. Though, every time it is shot, the user's arm recoils

    ±± Declined ±± Similar technique exists.


    (sunagakure no jutsu) hidden in sand technique
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary, Defence
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The User Channels chakra all throughout their body an then blend into sand and then move in and out of other sand in the area undetected. While this is being used the user gains the ability to move from one spot covered in sand to another, even if they are not together, but the sand must be at least in a 50 meter radius or it will not work. This technique is similar to water release: hidden in water technique. While inside the sand the user will move at high speeds but nowhere near the gates.while this used the user is still detectable by sensory or byakugan, sharingan or rinnegan users.

    ±± Approved ±±


    (suna Karyū Endan)- sand dragon bullet
    Rank: A
    Type: Offense
    Range: short-Mid
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The User preforms the Ram → Horse → Snake → Dragon → Rat → Ox → Tiger and then sends sand at the opponent from their sand gourd which are then manipulated into a genuine-looking dragon. The Sand is divided to launch a left side, right side, and frontal assault in all three directions at once as it moves which can knock a person if they come in contact with. since sand is lighter than earth, it moves faster than earth stone dragon
    Note: can only be used three times

    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Do not submit EVER a rip off of a cannon technique. Consider this a warning.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Lightning Drilling Fang ( Raiton Kussaku Kiba)
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Descriptions: A more heightened version of Fang over Fang. The user spins while releasing lightning chakra making him approach at a much faster speed than usual even if the user doesnt hit the enemy the lightning can jump from the user to the opponent if the user gets to close range and stun them
    -only Blade Hyuga and anyone with permission can use it
    -Must be in the Inuzuka clan


    Flaming Drilling Fang (Honō kussaku kiba)
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: short-long
    Chakra cost:30
    Damage:60
    Descriptions: Another heightened version of Fang over Fang. As the user is spinning he/she spews fire out of their mouth which engulfs the users spin in flames burning everything in its path.
    -Must be an Inuzuka
    -Only me and anyone I allow can use this
    -Even if the fire is put out during the spin via water the user is still able to continue the normal fang over fang


    Earth Drilling Fang ( Chikyū kussaku kiba)
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: short-long
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user begins spinning toward the target while gathering earth from the ground engulfing himself in stone due to the excessive weight the user is slowed down dramatically though increases his power in the process
    -Must be an Inuzuka
    -Only I can use this and anyone I allow


    ±± All Declined ±± Restrictions? You submitted 3 S-Rank elemental techniques without a single restriction. This is wasting our time as you know they won't be approved. Also, lightning jumping and hitting the target regardless of it being countered? Not going to happen.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    I am updating the 1st and 2nd jutsu...
    Quote Originally Posted by Akisha View Post
    Ice Release: Ten Thousand Blades Dance = (Hyouton: Juuman Ha Odori)
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 90
    Description: The user will begin by performing a single hand seal and then creates an opening within the sky that seems like 2 large circles. The first one is 15meters wide and is representing the wind chakra, while the second one is 10m wide and represents the water chakra. Combining the 2 chakra natures the user makes the air around the opening extremely cold, making ice form into the atmosphere. Then by using shape manipulation the user forms thousands upon thousands of countless small thin but incredibly sharp blades of ice that almost look like light blue sakura petals. In a matter of seconds the blades will rain down through the 2nd oppening (the smaller one, which is 10m wide) piercing through everyone that is in the 10m radius and ripping them to shreds.
    Note: If the user is in the 10m radius he will also be killed.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: The user will take 20 damage after use due to the large amount of chakra used for the technique.
    Note: The user needs to concentrate his chakra for 1 turn in order for the spikes to be fully formed.
    Note: No Ice for 2 turns after this technique is used.
    Note: No S rank or above water or wind for the following turn.
    Note: Can only be taught by Akisha.
    Note: After the jutsu is over, the user's speed is dramaticly increased for 2 turns. The user can not run, though he can walk, it would be very slow and painful.
    Note: The user's reactions are also decreased for the following turn because of the large amount of chakra used.



    ~Approved~
    Ice Release: Ten Thousand Blades Dance = (Hyouton: Juuman Ha Odori)
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 90
    Description: The user will begin by performing a single hand seal and then creates an opening within the sky that seems like 2 large circles. The first one is 15meters wide and is representing the wind chakra, while the second one is 10m wide and represents the water chakra. Combining the 2 chakra natures the user makes the air around the opening extremely cold, making ice form into the atmosphere. Then by using shape manipulation the user forms thousands upon thousands of countless small thin but incredibly sharp blades of ice that almost look like light blue sakura petals. In a matter of seconds the blades will rain down through the 2nd oppening (the smaller one, which is 10m wide) piercing through everyone that is in the 10m radius and ripping them to shreds. Though this isn’t the only way to use the jutsu. The user can also concentrate all of his chakra and increase the size of the 2 opennings, making them big enough to cover a whole village, but it will cost the user’s life.
    Note: If the user is in the 10m radius he will also be killed.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: The user will take 20 damage after use due to the large amount of chakra used for the technique.
    Note: The user needs to concentrate his chakra for 1 turn in order for the spikes to be fully formed.
    Note: No Ice for 2 turns after this technique is used.
    Note: No S rank or above water or wind for the following turn.
    Note: Can only be taught by Akisha.
    Note: After the jutsu is over, the user's speed is dramaticly increased for 2 turns. The user can not run, though he can walk, it would be very slow and painful.
    Note: The user's reactions are also decreased for the following turn because of the large amount of chakra used.
    Note: If used on the larger scale the user will die after use.


    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. That technique is already very very powerful. No need to make it more powerful. Also, if you actually wanted to make it bigger use the "capable of covering the whole battlefield" and not to destroy the village.


    Quote Originally Posted by Akisha View Post
    Wolverine Mode: Stage 2 = (Kuzuri Modo: dankai 2)
    Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short/Middle/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This second stage of the wolverine mode is way faster than the first one. It requires the user to be very calm and most important not in panic. The user performs a row of 4 hand seals and by covering his whole body in Wolverine chakra he can enter this 2nd stage. The senses of smell and hearing are increased dramatically – the user can locate his opponent’s location very easily and can know the kind of chakra nature is using against him (like lightning or fire for example for example). The speed also increases and it can reach up to the speed or Rock Lee without his weights. Strength is increased up to Raikage’s level without the ration armor. While in this form no genjutsu up to A rank (including A) won’t work on the user because of the wolverine chakra that blocks the disruption of the chakra flow.
    • Lasts for 4 turns.
    • Can only be used/taught by Akisha
    • Once per battle.
    • After the use of this mode, the user’s chakra will be limited for only 3 more turns and after they are over he wont be able to use chakra due to the hard pressure of the user’s mucles.
    • Tis reactions of the user (after the use of the mode) will be much slower and he won’t be able to have that much time to react.
    • The speed after use is also limited – the user won’t be able to run, and if he tries to walk it would be very slow.
    • No S rank techniques or above at the first turn after the mode is over.
    Approved
    Wolverine Mode: Stage 2 = (Kuzuri Modo: dankai 2)
    Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short/Middle/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: This second stage of the wolverine mode is way faster than the first one. It requires the user to be very calm and most important not in panic. The user performs a row of 4 hand seals and by covering his whole body in Wolverine chakra he can enter this 2nd stage. The user's canine teeth grow, the nails take a claw-like appearance and the body can fight freely in cold weather. A dense fur forms around him much like a wolverine, which protects him from any ice techniques up to A rank that freeze (ones that stab will still hurt the user) The senses of smell and hearing are increased dramatically – the user can locate his opponent’s location very easily and can know the kind of chakra nature is being used against him (like lightning or fire for example). The speed also increases and it can reach up to the speed or A's with his raiton armor. Strength is increased up to Raikage’s level with the ration armor. While in this form no genjutsu up to A rank (including A) won’t work on the user because of the wolverine chakra that blocks the disruption of the chakra flow.
    • Lasts for 5 turns.
    • Can only be used/taught by Akisha
    • Once per battle.
    • After the use of this mode, the user’s chakra will be limited for only 3 more turns and after they are over he wont be able to use chakra due to the hard pressure of the user’s mucles.
    • His reactions of the user (after the use of the mode) will be much slower and he won’t be able to have that much time to react.
    • The speed after use is also limited – the user won’t be able to run, and if he tries to walk it would be very slow and painful.
    • The user gains +5 to all taijutsu.
    • No clones can be used during this mode and if there some already created will poof away immediately.
    • After the use, no Forbidden ranked techniques for the end of the battle.
    • Only 2 techniques can be used during the turn this mode is being activated (meaning this jutsu counts as 2).


    ±± Declined ±± Too much.



    I added some information about how the user looks when using this. I kinda noticed that the 2nd stage is quite similar to the original wolverine mode so I had to make some changes about the speed and strenght, and because it's stronger now - I added a few more restrictions.

    New submittion:

    Sealing Technique: The Devil’s Armors = (Fuinjutsu: Akuma no Yoroi)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: n/a
    Description: Many years ago the Sage of the Six Paths sealed away three very strong and dangerous if in the wrong hands armors. Each of them had a special ability that was feared but at the same time wanted by the ninjas, so there are only few who can use those now. By using the 2 seals on his palms, the user is able to summon any of these armors on him, allowing him to defend against certain attacks or use them for offensive purpose.
    Heaven's Wheel Armor (天輪の鎧 Tenrin no Yoroi): Plated armor covers the user’s chest and stomach, with a large metal star over it, while wearing large pants that has metal plating in the upper area. The user’s neck is uncovered. and he/she has large metal wings that appear to be made of individual blades, as well as a wing-like headpiece While wearing this armor, the user seemingly gains the ability to fly and while wearing this armor, the user is able to summon a large amount of swords (roughly more than 200), and launch weapons at his/her opponent(s) in a variety of differrent ways. The armor is meant to be used for facing multiple opponents. It increases the user’s speed while flying, up to the level of Rock Lee without his weights.
    The Giant's Armor (巨人の鎧 Kyojin no Yoroi): This is a large, furry, golden colored armor with that sports a large cross on the breastplate. The armor is completed by a headgear with the appearance of a pair of large metal ears. This armor gives the user an enhanced strength: This armor increases the user’s strength in the form of his throwing power, allowing the user to throw objects or even people at far distance with pinpoint accuracy. The user’s strength in the form of brutal power is also increased giving the user a +10 damage to all taijutsu attacks.
    Adamantine Armor (金剛の鎧 Kongō no Yoroi): The Adamantine Armor is a large, blue and navy colored armor. The breastplate is composed of different plates joined together, with four, prominent tube-like ornaments on the front, right above his chest, below the high armored collar. The shoulder pads are very large and sport prominent plates shaped like spikes, protruding from a far darker part which composes the base of the structure. The armor is completed by a helmet which covers the top and the sides of the user’s face, leaving the back part of his head exposed, and sporting prominent spikes jutting outwards. The armor gives the user immense defense: This armor is the ultimate, high-level defensive stance. While wearing it, the user can 2 times per battle defend against attacks up to A rank. The armor features two shields on the arms, which by concentrating chakra can be brought together to generate a large barrier, full of chakra, allowing the user to defend against 1 s rank technique, if done that – the armor will not be used for the rest of the battle and it must be changed.
    Restrictions:
    • The user can use only 1 armor at the same time.
    • The armor switch is done extremely fast, so the user must use 10+
    • chakra every time he wants to switch armor.
    • No forbidden ranked techniques can be used when The Giant's Armor is
    • activated.
    • No clones can be used while Heaven's Wheel Armor is on.
    • No genjutsu can be used during the Adamantine Armor is on.
    • A turn has to past before an armor can be changed.
    • Can only be taught by Akisha.



    ±± Declined ±± This isn't a sealing technique...its 3 custom weapons submitted in one technique. You know what that means.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-26-2012 at 06:04 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by -Cobalt- View Post
    Please edit whatever you see fit to make the techniques fit for approval ^^

    Name: (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Gull Gen'ei Shishou)Summoning Technique:Gull Illusion Master
    Rank:S
    Typeffense/Defense
    Range:Short
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:After preforming the necesaart hand seals the user summons Ayumu,the Genjutsu master from the Gull Citadel.His intelligence has guided him into learning the art of Genjutsu.He has spent most of his life in the Citadel and over his years he has shown an affinity to Genjutsu.He has spent many years studying the art of illusion and has proven to be very worthy in battle.In the „Great Flame Wars“, in which the Gulls fought the Crows,Ayumu triumphed alongside his brothers and thus they were known as the Great Three Brothers.He is the oldest of those three thus being the most experienced and wisest Gull.He often gives council to his King and Queen and is considered the first advisor of the Gull Kingdom.He has the ability to use all Genjutsu techniques but must perform hand seals(regular Genjutsu only).He also gained the ability to be immune to B-rank and below Genjutsu.Once per battle he can put the opponent into an S-ranked Genjutsu in which the opponent will see a gull flying directly into him,firstly making it look like the user summoned it.Though simple the genjutsu is so powerful,it is very difficult to break out of it.The opponent can inflict pain to himself but it has to be immense (cutting of ones hand,stabbing one self in the gut or biting of ones tounge).He is very grumpy due to his age and not very quick.He is big enough to carry 3 persons.His feathers are formed in a manner to resemble fingers,allowing him to perform hand seals.
    Notence summoned,Ayumu stays on the field 4 turns and can only be summoned once per battle.
    Note:His ability can only be used once per battle.
    Note:No genjutsu above C rank can be used by the user while Ayumu is on the field.
    Note:Every move he uses counts as a move of the user.
    Note:Can only be used and taught by –Cobalt-.
    Note:Must have signed the Gull contract.

    ±± Declined ±± I'm ok with him using all genjutsu up to S-Rank the user knows except those he logically can't use. I'm ok with that S-Rank genjutsu he can cast once per battle but range in this genjutsu? Also, take the part about the huge amount of pain and etc etc. Its not up to you or your genjutsu. Genjutsu is released through pain but needing to hack your hand off is simply too much and i won't accept that. Take that part out completely.

    I've changed the description almost completely but I bolded the important parts regarding his abilities.I'm sorry if I missed something.

    Name: (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Gull Ninjutsu Shishou)SummoningTechnique:Gull Ninja Arts Master
    Rank:S
    Typeffense/Defense
    Range:Short
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:After preforming the necessary hand seals the user summons Takumi,the Ninjutsu master from the Gull Citadel.Just like Ayumu he has spent many years in the Citadel learning the art of Ninjutsu thus he became highly skilled at it.He has mastered all Ninjutsu techniques (basic ninjutsu) and is able to preform the techniques with hand seals.He is the middle brother from the Great Three Brothers.Even though he isn't intelligent as Ayumu or strong as Katashi,he has proven great skill in Ninjutsu.He can carry two persons on his back but he isn't extremely quick due to his age.Once per battle,Takumi can use his ability to enhance the users ninjutsu techniques thus increasing their range,size,power and damage (elemental and non-elemental techniques).He preforms this by sending his great chakra reserves into the user.He is younger than Ayumu and less grumpier than him but he dislikes slackers and lazy summoners.His feathers are shaped in a manner to resemble fingers,allowing him to use hand seals.
    Note:Can only be used and taught by -Cobalt-.
    Note:Must have signed the Gull contract.
    Notence summoned,Takumi stays on the field 5 turns and can only be summoned once.
    Note:His ability can only be used once per battle.Once it is activated the ability lasts 3 turns,and after that the user is unable Ninjutsu above B-rank for the rest of the battle (only if Takumi's power is used).
    Note:While Takumi is on the field the user is unable to preform B-rank and above Ninjutsu (Non-elemental).
    Note:Every move he preforms counts as a move of the user.

    ±± Declined ±± How long does this empowering of your techniques last? to what degree? I won't accept it without you clearly stating the amount of empowering it will give you.


    Changed his ability and bolded it.Also I've restricted the users abilities while he is summoned.

    Name: (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Gull Taijutsu Shishou)Summoning Technique:Gull Body Technique Master
    Rank:S
    Typeffensive/Defensive
    Range:Short
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:After preforming the necessary hand seals the user summons Katashi,the youngest of the Great Three Brothers.It was his actions that brought the victory to the Gulls in the "Great Flame Wars" between them and the Crows.Unlike his older brothers Katashi isn't the smartest Gull,he relies on his physical strength which allowed him to become a master at Taijutsu (he mastered the basic one only).Over the years spent in the Gull Citadel he has shown affinity to Taijutsu but the fact that he is a gull has made it hard for him to do it.The elder Gull's taught him a complex form of the Transformation technique which allows him to turn himself into a human and stay in that form for as long as he wishes.After learning the Transformation he slipped himself into human society learning of their customs and traditions.He has learned the art of Taijutsu in Konoha from Might Guy himself.Thus he has gained the ability to use Taijutsu techniques up to the forbidden ranks (only regular Taijutsu,excluding the Forbidden ones).He is the youngest of the Great Three Brothers and still in his prime years thus he is very fast and strong.When in his gull from he can carry 2 persons.He is friendly and passionate about fighting similar to Might Guy.
    Note:Can only be used an taught by -Cobalt-.
    Note:Must have signed the Gull contract.
    Note:Can only be summoned 2 times per battle,and once summoned he stays on the field for 4 turns.
    Note:Every move he uses counts as a move of the user.
    Note:No taijutsu techs above B rank can be preformed by the user while he is on the field.

    I've elaborated how he is able to use Taijutsu and bolded it.I also bolded a note.I've reduced for how long he can stay on the battlefield and increased the amount of times he can be summoned.


    ±± Declined ±± Once per battle, non gates taijutsu (i want you to make that clear...). also why the hell would he restrict your use of taijutsu? no need for that.

    Name: (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Gull Gen'ei Shishou)Summoning Technique:Gull Illusion Master
    Rank:S
    Typeffense/Defense
    Range:Short
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:After preforming the necesaart hand seals the user summons Ayumu,the Genjutsu master from the Gull Citadel.His intelligence has guided him into learning the art of Genjutsu.He has spent most of his life in the Citadel and over his years he has shown an affinity to Genjutsu.He has spent many years studying the art of illusion and has proven to be very worthy in battle.In the „Great Flame Wars“, in which the Gulls fought the Crows,Ayumu triumphed alongside his brothers and thus they were known as the Great Three Brothers.He is the oldest of those three thus being the most experienced and wisest Gull.He often gives council to his King and Queen and is considered the first advisor of the Gull Kingdom.He has the ability to use all Genjutsu techniques but must perform hand seals(regular Genjutsu only).He also gained the ability to be immune to B-rank and below Genjutsu.Once per battle he can put the opponent into an S-ranked Mid-Ranged Genjutsu in which the opponent will see a gull flying directly into him,firstly making it look like the user summoned it. This Genjutsu cannot harm the enemy in any way though.He is very grumpy due to his age and not very quick.He is big enough to carry 3 persons.His feathers are formed in a manner to resemble fingers,allowing him to perform hand seals.
    Notence summoned,Ayumu stays on the field 4 turns and can only be summoned once per battle.
    Note:His ability can only be used once per battle.
    Note:No genjutsu above C rank can be used by the user while Ayumu is on the field.
    Note:Every move he uses counts as a move of the user.
    Note:Can only be used and taught by –Cobalt-.
    Note:Must have signed the Gull contract.

    ±± Approved ±±


    Removed the part about the immense pain stuff.

    Name: (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Gull Ninjutsu Shishou)SummoningTechnique:Gull Ninja Arts Master
    Rank:S
    Typeffense/Defense
    Range:Short
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:After preforming the necessary hand seals the user summons Takumi,the Ninjutsu master from the Gull Citadel.Just like Ayumu he has spent many years in the Citadel learning the art of Ninjutsu thus he became highly skilled at it.He has mastered all Ninjutsu techniques (basic ninjutsu) and is able to preform the techniques with hand seals.He is the middle brother from the Great Three Brothers.Even though he isn't intelligent as Ayumu or strong as Katashi,he has proven great skill in Ninjutsu.He can carry two persons on his back but he isn't extremely quick due to his age.Once per battle,Takumi can use his ability to enhance the users ninjutsu techniques thus increasing their range,size,power and damage (elemental and non-elemental techniques).He preforms this by sending his great chakra reserves into the user.He is younger than Ayumu and less grumpier than him but he dislikes slackers and lazy summoners.His feathers are shaped in a manner to resemble fingers,allowing him to use hand seals.
    Note:Can only be used and taught by -Cobalt-.
    Note:Must have signed the Gull contract.
    Notence summoned,Takumi stays on the field 5 turns and can only be summoned once.
    Note:His ability can only be used once per battle.Once it is activated the ability lasts 3 turns,and after that the user is unable Ninjutsu above B-rank for the rest of the battle (only if Takumi's power is used).The users techniques are doubled in all categories (rank,range,size) within reason.
    Note:While Takumi is on the field the user is unable to preform B-rank and above Ninjutsu (Non-elemental).
    Note:Every move he preforms counts as a move of the user.

    For how long it lasts was already bolded,I've just added to what extent it enhances my techniques.

    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. It was as i feared... OP


    Name: (Kuchiyose No Jutsu:Gull Taijutsu Shishou)Summoning Technique:Gull Body Technique Master
    Rank:S
    Typeffensive/Defensive
    Range:Short
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:After preforming the necessary hand seals the user summons Katashi,the youngest of the Great Three Brothers.It was his actions that brought the victory to the Gulls in the "Great Flame Wars" between them and the Crows.Unlike his older brothers Katashi isn't the smartest Gull,he relies on his physical strength which allowed him to become a master at Taijutsu (he mastered the basic one only).Over the years spent in the Gull Citadel he has shown affinity to Taijutsu but the fact that he is a gull has made it hard for him to do it.The elder Gull's taught him a complex form of the Transformation technique which allows him to turn himself into a human and stay in that form for as long as he wishes.After learning the Transformation he slipped himself into human society learning of their customs and traditions.He has learned the art of Taijutsu in Konoha from Might Guy himself.Thus he has gained the ability to use Taijutsu techniques up to the forbidden ranks (regular Taijutsu,non gates.).He can also use Kenjutsu techniques which he learned in Kirigakure.When in human form he can use ninja tools as well.He is the youngest of the Great Three Brothers and still in his prime years thus he is very fast and strong.When in his gull from he can carry 2 persons.He is friendly and passionate about fighting similar to Might Guy.
    Note:Can only be used an taught by -Cobalt-.
    Note:Must have signed the Gull contract.
    Note:Can only be summoned once per battle,and once summoned he stays on the field for 4 turns.
    Note:Every move he uses counts as a move of the user.
    Note:He cannot use Kenjutsu and Taijutsu in the same turn.

    ±± Approved ±±


    I've removed the part that restricts me,made it clear he cannot use gates but I've allowed him to use Kenjutsu techniques.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-26-2012 at 06:13 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    first attempt ever

    Fire Release - Massive Impact(火は - 大規模な影響のプレスリリース)

    Rank: S
    Type: Offense/Defence
    Range: mid/long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description:The user molds a huge amount of katon chakra throughout the body, once the chakra is built, the user does three hand seals, which triggers highly dense and concentrated katon to manipulate around the user, creating a mid sized circle that circulates clock – wise around the user. When the user is ready, the user claps their hands together causing the circular blaze to immediately keep growing into a bigger circle of fire, spreading into an even bigger circle that destroys everything that it touches(while keeping your hands together after clapping) . this jutsu’s speed moves at the users rank, so that you can determine how fast it feeds. Works well in a forest, so that it can clear the area.

    Restrictions~
    -must have sharingan active
    -can't use any S ranked jutsu for 2 turns
    -can only be used once in battle
    -must be a sannin or higher to use
    - cant use fire jutsu for two turns
    -can only be taught by Uchiha Paulsama




    Fire Release – Concentrated Ignition(火がリリース - 集中した点火)

    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary/Offense/Defense
    Range: mid/long/short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: ?
    Description: the user molds katon chakra while quickly doing five hand seals , tiger > boar >rat> boar>tiger, once the handseals are complete the user claps their hands, and the users hands are coated with fire, an the user is able to touch an object , an light the object on fire with concentrated katon chakra (not a normal fire). Weapons, rocks,etc can be enhanced by this jutsu to make the attacks more effective, coating the object in fire just like the users hands.
    Restrictions~
    -must have sharingan active
    -can only use twice in battle
    - can’t use any other fire jutsu while active
    -stays active for two turns
    -can only be taught by Uchiha Paulsama


    ±± All Declined ±± Similar techniques already exist.
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-26-2012 at 06:16 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Jacob Moore View Post
    Resubmitting. @Bold: Anything that was edited.
    Text in the Violet color is information regarding anything that was edited.

    (Genjutsu: Donna Ko_tan Shita za Shin Beniya of Do_ri? Kaosu ando Hakkyo)-Illusion Technique: What Lies Beneath the Thin Veneer of Reason? Chaos and Madness
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:This Genjutsu is one of the most efficient in history, created after several years of studying various powerful Genjutsu users. The user begins by placing the opponent under the influence of an illusion, where they dream they are falling off a huge cliff face, and continue to fall forever; meanwhile in actuality, they are merely dreaming, and their body is asleep. However, the true power of this jutsu comes with its secondary effects. While the opponent is asleep, the user manipulates the flow of chakra in the targets cerebral nervous system, causing the body to unnecessarily begin to produce large amounts of DMT because the target is dreaming. While usually the powerful Hallucinogenic properties of DMT are negated by MAOI (monoamine oxidase), if a large enough dose is produced, and reaches the brain before it can be metabolized by MAOI, the person will be subject to powerful hallucinations beyond their control. After this secondary process is complete, the Genjutsu is automatically cancelled out, and the afflicted person wakes up. This leaves the DMT to take its effect once it reaches the brain. Some psychological effects may include an experience of radiant colors, objects and surfaces appearing to ripple or "breathe", colored patterns behind the closed eyelids (eidetic imagery), crawling geometric patterns overlaying walls and other objects, morphing objects, a sense that one's thoughts are spiraling into themselves, loss of a sense of identity or the ego (known as "ego death"), and other powerful psycho-physical reactions. Many people will begin experience a dissolution between themselves and the "outside world." These strong hallucinations are also accompanied by seeing imaginary objects that aren't really there. Because the drug is all natural, and not "manifested" by the Genjutsu itself, the effects last a much longer time than any ordinary Genjutsu making it highly effective against affected targets (In reality, a dose like this would last around 3 minutes), this leaves the affected target subject to powerful illusions for a while, and unable to properly mould chakra and react accordingly to things going on in reality. All that is required to activate this Genjutsu is sight of the opponent from the waist up.

    ~Can only be used once
    ~Cannot use Genjutsu for the next turn, and can only use A Rank and below Genjutsu the next two turns afterwards.
    ~The effects of the Genjutsu (DMT) remain for the following 2 turns after usage.
    ~Note:(DMT/Dimethyltryptamine: is a naturally occurring psychedelic compound of the tryptamine family. Trace elements can be found in mammals and Humans produced by an enzyme during metabolism. Metabolism, as you are aware occurs actively while you sleep as well as while you are awake. This drug, is basically what makes you dream at night and the body naturally produces it.)

    Since Genjutsu revolve around manipulating the cerbral nervous system to cause illusionary pain to a target, me manipulating that part of the Brain to make it "believe" that it needs to produce more DMT should also be possible.

    ||Declined|| If this ability is activated by sight of the opponent from the waist up, it should be short range.
    Resubmitting:
    Changes in Bold

    (Genjutsu: Donna Ko_tan Shita za Shin Beniya of Do_ri? Kaosu ando Hakkyo)-Illusion Technique: What Lies Beneath the Thin Veneer of Reason? Chaos and Madness
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:S
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:This Genjutsu is one of the most efficient in history, created after several years of studying various powerful Genjutsu users. The user begins by placing the opponent under the influence of an illusion, where they dream they are falling off a huge cliff face, and continue to fall forever; meanwhile in actuality, they are merely dreaming, and their body is asleep. However, the true power of this jutsu comes with its secondary effects. While the opponent is asleep, the user manipulates the flow of chakra in the targets cerebral nervous system, causing the body to unnecessarily begin to produce large amounts of DMT because the target is dreaming. While usually the powerful Hallucinogenic properties of DMT are negated by MAOI (monoamine oxidase), if a large enough dose is produced, and reaches the brain before it can be metabolized by MAOI, the person will be subject to powerful hallucinations beyond their control. After this secondary process is complete, the Genjutsu is automatically cancelled out, and the afflicted person wakes up. This leaves the DMT to take its effect once it reaches the brain. Some psychological effects may include an experience of radiant colors, objects and surfaces appearing to ripple or "breathe", colored patterns behind the closed eyelids (eidetic imagery), crawling geometric patterns overlaying walls and other objects, morphing objects, a sense that one's thoughts are spiraling into themselves, loss of a sense of identity or the ego (known as "ego death"), and other powerful psycho-physical reactions. Many people will begin experience a dissolution between themselves and the "outside world." These strong hallucinations are also accompanied by seeing imaginary objects that aren't really there. Because the drug is all natural, and not "manifested" by the Genjutsu itself, the effects last a much longer time than any ordinary Genjutsu making it highly effective against affected targets (In reality, a dose like this would last around 3 minutes), this leaves the affected target subject to powerful illusions for a while, and unable to properly mould chakra and react accordingly to things going on in reality. All that is required to activate this Genjutsu is sight of the opponent from the waist up.

    ~Can only be used once
    ~Cannot use Genjutsu for the next turn, and can only use A Rank and below Genjutsu the next two turns afterwards.
    ~The effects of the Genjutsu (DMT) remain for the following 2 turns after usage.
    ~Note:(DMT/Dimethyltryptamine: is a naturally occurring psychedelic compound of the tryptamine family. Trace elements can be found in mammals and Humans produced by an enzyme during metabolism. Metabolism, as you are aware occurs actively while you sleep as well as while you are awake. This drug, is basically what makes you dream at night and the body naturally produces it.)

    Since Genjutsu revolve around manipulating the cerbral nervous system to cause illusionary pain to a target, me manipulating that part of the Brain to make it "believe" that it needs to produce more DMT should also be possible.

    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Although in theory it would be possible, this became simply too close to a technique that needs medical training. And those customs require Nexus permission.

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    (Kage☆Boshi)-Shadow☆Star
    Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: The user begins by altering their stance, placing the left foot slightly forward, and holding their sword upright with the hilt in front of the right shoulder. The blade should also slope slightly to the rear (The Hasso Kendo stance for those who don't know). Upon taking this stance, the user performs a "Soul Resonance" with themselves, and with their weapon. By focusing chakra all throughout the body, the user establishes an equilibrium between themselves and their weapon where the chakra resonates within , much like what is done with the Samurai Sabre Technique. However, whereas usually the chakra would envelop the blade, this chakra forms a shell within the blade itself, where the chakra can rebound infinitely and effectively resonate with itself; As it forms a shell of resonating chakra within the blade allowing it to cut through near anything, unlike the Samurai Sabre Technique, this chakra cannot be released in the form of ranged chakra shock-waves. The constant stream of chakra throughout the body serves to forcefully augment the muscles of the body, bringing the user into a peak condition increasing their speed and strength by up to fifteen percent. The chakra released from the Tenketsu can also take the form of several whip like entities that can subsequently be used to repeatedly attack the enemy, with the intention of landing multiple crushing blows, that are also capable of slicing the opponent apart; These whips can also be used defensively in order to defend against close ranged attacks, and knock away incoming projectile weapons.
    ~The use of the whips counts as one of the three allotted moves allowed in a single turn.
    ~This technique can only be used to block incoming attacks of equal or lower rank.

    ±± Declined ±± The idea isn't bad but you added to many abilities. Also, this is similar to existing techniques, both Kenjutsu and Custom Weapons.


    (Kage☆Boshi: Ichi no Kata Rengoku)-Shadow☆Star: First Form - Chain of Blackness
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: This technique is a variation of the Samurai Sabre technique where the user utilizes shape transformation in order to change the shape of their blade to resemble a long sharp sickle-blade, with white ornante patterns on it with a handle attached for the wielder, accentuated with three short spikes. A long chain formed solely of the users chakra "solidifies" allowing for the user to throw it towards the opponent in the form of a long-range attack. Because of its range, it is an incredibly versatile and powerful style of fighting, however the style lacks in speed and stealth. With the chain being made of the users chakra, it encircles the users body at all times while in use giving some-what protection from assault on all sides. In this variation, the user does not release chakra shock-waves, as focus remains primarily on the shape and control of the chain.
    ~Can only be used three times per battle

    Looks like this:



    ±± Declined ±± How long does this last? Because the description makes it similar to a technique mixed with a custom weapon.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Lord of Kaos View Post
    at the play on words.

    1. (Water Style: Atomic Abyss: Poseidon's Aquatic Destruction) ♆ Suiton: Atomikku Shin'en: Poseidon's Suijou Metsubou
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range: Close-Long (most effective up close)
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80 (+40 to user if hit)
    Description: The user starts by making several (up to 5 in short range, 10 mid range and 15 in long range, basically five in each range) condensed large balls of water with great pressure compressing them to the size of basketballs but the solidarity of ice (still water, just tightly compacted). The user then causes the orbs to sink into the water source he and his opponent are standing on, creating an mine-field in the ocean of sorts. If the user choices to, he can also create said orbs in the water itself, preventing the opponent a chance to detect them (doujutsu and chakra sensing abilities aside, of course). The orbs are then spread in a pentagonal shape, surrounding the user and opponent, with 3 pentagons in total: one surrounding the enemy in short range, one in mid range and the last in long range. If the opponent moves around underwater, he will cause a chain reaction, causing all of the water orbs to forcibly explode, causing great damage to anything caught underwater, with enough force to break bones on contact and cause severe internal damage to and rupture organs and even remove limbs. If both the user and enemy are standing on the water surface, and they move, it will cause the orbs near the surface to explode firstly, still causing a chain-reaction. The explosions, if above water, have the force and power to blow holes in metal.
    *Can only be used once*
    *after using, neither the user nor the opponent can move for 3 turns. After the three turns, the orbs loose their "compressed-ness", for lack of a better word, and the user and opponent will have no threats presented when moving*
    *If the user is on the water when detonated, he will take the same damage the enemy would take*
    *After using, the user cannot use water jutsus for three turns*
    *The user is able to control the orbs released nearby him when he moves but doing so takes a great deal of chakra from him and thus, he can only use 1 jutsu per turn if he does this (must be stated). The user is only able to take control of up to 3 orbs with each one coming from a different range, i.e. one from short, one from mid and one from long range. Once the explosions start, however, he will no longer be able to control them*
    *If hit by orbs, the user's bones will be broken and damaged and he will be unable to move*
    *Can only be used by Lord of Kaos*

    ±± Pending ±± Just a few remarks: If it causes damage to yourself (which apparently it does), its not an S-Rank. Also, the description needs to be a bit more clear regarding the 3 pentagons. Is their range (short, mid, long) in relation to you or to the enemy? Also, the word you are looking for is "lack of pressure" :D Contact me through Vm with the replies to this and i'll recheck.
    1. (Water Style: Atomic Abyss: Poseidon's Aquatic Destruction) ♆ Suiton: Atomikku Shin'en: Poseidon's Suijou Metsubou
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Close-Long
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 90 (+40 to user if hit)
    Description: The user starts by making several (up to 5 in short range, 10 mid range and 15 in long range, basically five in each range) condensed large balls of water with great pressure compressing them to the size of basketballs but the solidarity of ice (still water, just tightly compacted). The user then causes the orbs to sink into the water source he and his opponent are standing on, creating an mine-field in the ocean of sorts. If the user choices to, he can also create said orbs in the water itself, preventing the opponent a chance to detect them (doujutsu and chakra sensing abilities aside, of course). The orbs are then spread in a pentagonal shape, surrounding the user and opponent, with 3 pentagons in total: one surrounding the enemy in short range, one in mid range and the last in long range. The five orbs in each range are in relation to the target, i.e. one pentagon that reaches out to the borders of short range around the enemy, another reaching the boundaries of mid range from the enemy's start point, and the same with long range. If the opponent moves around underwater, he will cause a chain reaction, causing all of the water orbs to forcibly explode, causing great damage to anything caught underwater, with enough force to break bones on contact and cause severe internal damage to and rupture organs and even remove limbs. If both the user and enemy are standing on the water surface, and they move, it will cause the orbs near the surface to explode firstly, still causing a chain-reaction. The explosions, if above water, have the force and power to blow holes in metal.
    *Can only be used once*
    *after using, neither the user nor the opponent can move for 3 turns. After the three turns, the orbs loose the pressure within said orbs and the user and opponent will have no threats presented when moving*
    *If the user is on the water when detonated, he will take the same damage the enemy would take*
    *After using, the user cannot use water jutsus for three turns*
    *The user is able to control the orbs released nearby him when he moves but doing so takes a great deal of chakra from him and thus, he can only use 1 jutsu per turn if he does this (must be stated). The user is only able to take control of up to 3 orbs with each one coming from a different range, i.e. one from short, one from mid and one from long range. Once the explosions start, however, he will no longer be able to control them*
    *If hit by orbs, the user's bones will be broken and damaged and he will be unable to move*
    *Can only be used by Lord of Kaos*

    ±± Approved ±±



    I actually thought that I changed the rank to Forbidden, my apologies. As for the pentagons, it's intended to be in relation to the enemy. I meant to say they are short/mid/long range in relation's to the enemy's position, if that makes better sense (I'm having a bit of trouble explaining properly xD). And yes, that's what I meant!
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kougake Shippuu) Hurricane Gauntlets
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Damage: 80
    Chakra: 40 (for abilities)
    Description: The hurricane gauntlets are two gauntlets that cover the users whole forearm.
    They have two abilities, the first is the ability to release wind chakra in the form of hurricanes around the users forearms.
    the second is the abilitly to transform into two swords which can be strengethened by having the user channel wind chakra through the swords making them sharper and stronger.
    The two abilitys are activated in different ways. To activate the hurricanes around the users forearms the user simply has to pump wind chakra through the gauntlets and the gauntlets will make the wind into a violent hurricane around the forearm.
    But to activate the twin sword ability the user performs the tiger handseal and applies chakra, this causes the gauntlets to turn into two swords bound to the users forearms but a chain at the end of the swords hilt.
    When using the hurricane ability of the gauntlets the user can fire the hurricanes that have been created at the opponent up to mid range away (the hurricanes are A Rank).
    One of the main uses of the hurricane ability for the gauntlets is for more powerful close combat fighting.

    The hurricane gauntlets, when active can block projectile/stream type lightning jutsu up to A rank and B/A rank water projectiles, aswell as basic ninja tools by the user pointing his arms towards the jutsu/projectile and applying more chakra to the gauntlets, causing the hurricanes to increase in size and strength. (this is with the hurricane ability) This will cause projectile/stream type lightning jutsu's to be canceled out due to the wind hurricanes and water projectiles will either be blown back towards the opponent or will be re-directed.

    - Cannot perform any wind jutsu whilst the Hurricane Gauntlets are activated
    - Cannot perform jutsu that requires handseals whilst the twin swords ability is active
    - The user can alternate the abilities ie. have a sword active in one hand and the hurricane active in the other
    - The hurricanes that are fired are A rank
    - The hurricanes can only be fired 4 times
    - Firing the hurricanes counts towards the users 3 moves
    - Can block up to A rank projectile/stream type lightning jutsu, B/A rank water projectiles and basic ninja tools up to 4 times.
    - Blocking counts as a move from the 3 per turn.
    - Can only be used by Kato Rokuemon


    ±± Approved ±±
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Raiton:Byakurai)-Pale Lightning
    Type:Attack
    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:50
    Damage Points:90
    Description:This technique is similar to Chidori Sharp Spear, but its power is far exceeds it. The technique is performed by the user focuses their lightning chakra towards their hand, and begin to compress it. They then release the compressed lightning from their hand in the shape of a large thunderbolt. The thunderbolt is around 3x the size of Chidori Sharp Spear, and can go up to mid range, though when using this technique the user doesn't have the ability to move the lightning around like Chidori sharp spear. The Technique is forbidden because the user's hand which he used to fire byakurai becomes numb for one full turn, making it impossible to perform hand seals.

    -Can only be taught by Toshiro

    ~Still under process of being edited~


    ±± Pending ±± Resubmit in the new thread.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by The Pervy Sage View Post

    (Senning Iyoku ) - Sage's Will
    Type: Attack/defence
    Rank: A
    Range: All
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: +20
    Description: The user will focus their sage chakra as they perform a jutsu that isn't a sage jutsu. As they do so, they will gather their sage chakra (natural energy) and combine it with the jutsu they are using as they release it. In doing so, they will increate the power and size of the jutsu making it a sage jutsu. This takes it's toll on the sage user as it draing a potion of their sage chakra reducing sage mode.

    Note: Reduces sage mode by one turn
    Note: Can only be used in sage mode
    Note: Must have special permission from The Pervy Sage to use this

    ~All Approved~

    ~Updating~


    (Senning Iyoku ) - Sage's Will
    Type: Attack/defence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short to Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: +1 rank
    Description: The user will focus their sage chakra as they perform a jutsu that isn't a sage jutsu. As they do so, they will gather their sage chakra (natural energy) and combine it with the jutsu they are using as they release it. In doing so, they will increate the power and size of the jutsu making it a sage jutsu. This increase will be enough to increase original attack by one rank.. This takes it's toll on the sage user as it draining a potion of their sage chakra reducing sage mode.

    Note: Only works on A ranks and below
    Note: Reduces sage mode by one turn
    Note: Can only be used in sage mode/hawk mode
    Note: Must have special permission from The Pervy Sage to use this

    First bold: Added it to give a better idea of how much stronger it makes a technique to give a better idea in the rp instead of +20, because +20 is boosting a D rank, to a B rank technique.

    Second bold: Scorps made me

    Third bold: Hawk mode has the same principle as sage mode just using wind too, and so i made it so this jutsu is useable in that mode too as they both use natural energy




    (Sennin: Pervy power) - Sage art: Ero Ryoku
    Type: Attack/defence
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: N/a
    Description: This jutsu was specially designed after Naruto found he was able to throw the FRS by adding the sage chakra and shaping it. By using this technique and adding the sage chakra to the "Elemental Rasengan" (cannon S rank nin), the user is able to reshape it so that they are able to throw the elemental rasengan. This does not increase the power of the attack, just enables the user to throw the technique. Like the FRS, the elemantal rasengan will expand when the user wishes hitting everything within short range.


    Note: Reduces sage/hawk mode by one turn
    Note: Can only be used in sage mode/hawk mode
    Note: Must have special permission from The Pervy Sage to use this


    ±± Both Approved ±±
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Animal: Eurasian Lynx
    Scroll Owner: Sage of Darkness
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: Lynx King Anailous
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None for now

    ~info on Eurasian Lynx~
    http://dialspace.dial.pipex.com/agar...o/eurolynx.htm

    ±± Declined ±± Lynx contract already exists

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    (Raiton Kyuuten Hekireki) Lightning style Heavens Thunder
    Type:Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Mid Range
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points:40 (and 25 to the user)
    Description: After the user makes the necesary hand signs He/she will raise his/her hand and spin it while spinning the clouds in the sky take a spiral shape above the battle ground of the jutsu caster. The user will then clap his hands together and bolts of lightning will rain down on the battle field causing huge explosions. It is very hard to evade this technique thanks to the bolts of thunder raining down.

    ~note~
    - Can only be used 3 times.
    - The user of this jutsu will recive 25 damage
    - After using this technique the user can not use any B rank or above lightning techniques for 3 turns.
    - Can Only be used/taught by Sage of Darkness.

    ±± Declined ±± Similar techniques already exist.


    (Katon: Kyuuten kaki bakudan) Fire style: Heavens fire bombs
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost:25
    Damage points:40
    Description:The user will make a Tiger, then boar, and then snake hand signs and will take a deep breathe. After gathering a large amount of chakra in his lungs He will release the gathered chakra creating it into multiple fire bombs racing towards the enemy.

    ~note~
    - Can only be used/taught by Sage of Darkness
    - The user will remain breathless for awhile after performing this jutsu.

    ±± Declined ±± Similar techniques already exist.

    *Feel free to edit anything you'd like to make it more realistic*
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Weapon: Ryūkyū Kotōmaru (竜糾虎淘丸, Dragon-Seeking Tiger Culler)
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short-Mid
    Damage: N/A
    Chakra: N/A
    Description:
    The sword is normal at first. But when fed chakra, Kotōmaru becomes a deadly weapon of destruction. When the user feeds the sword chakra, a mass of dense energy erupts around the user obscuring the vision of others. When the energy clears the weilder is found with a new attire.



    A dragon head's head envelops the user's shoulder and grey strips of cloth cover the forearm. Kotōmaru's blade is now entirely composed of blue energy, and a cape of the same color as the cloth drapes the user's back. Two slivers of blue energy float next to the user's right shoulder, and a disc next to the user's right. The user also has a cape on their waist to foot.

    A charged Kotōmaru immensly increases the user's strength hundred fold and also speed and defense increase tenfold.

    Strengths:
    -Blade is indestructible (It is just pure energy)
    -Blade can be extended till mid range in a swing (Max)
    -The user's speed is boosted tenfold. Through the attire which is chakra infused causing the user to be able to move swiftly through the battle field without resistance and yet full control. (-1 To Kotōmaru Complete)
    -User has absolute defense against D-rank techniques
    -During Speed boosting, the user can move straight in to certain techniques without recoil or damage. (C-Rank and below)

    Elemental Strengths:
    Suiton (Defense): Can vapourize water technique (Up to C-rank)
    Fuuton (Defense): Weakens all Wind techniques (2-ranks) {Through massive energy of the sword and the attire causing Pressure changes around the user weakening Wind Techniques}

    Weaknesses:
    -Blade can only extend twice
    -User can only use the Speed Boost twice
    -Absolute Defense can only be used twice.
    -Kotōmaru Complete only lasts 4 turns MAX (Some techniques reduce length of Kotōmaru Complete)
    -Kotōmaru disintergrates to the Shrine it is from to recharge it's energy (Will be gone for the rest of the battle)
    -The user's right arm will be damaged from the use of Kotōmaru Complete


    Note: Can only be weilded By ~CoOkie Monster~

    ±± Declined ±± Hundred full? Tenfold? OP! Also, how does it accomplish that? Its a weapon.

    -----

    Name:Ryūkyū Zesshō Kentai (竜糾虎淘丸, Dragon-Seeking Finishing Thrust Combination)
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack (Combo)
    Range: Short-Mid
    Damage: 80
    Chakra: 40
    Description: During Kotōmaru Complete state the user charges chakra and Koto's energy. The user the uses an extreme speed boost to dive past the opponent slashing him. The user then straight after comes back and slashes the target through the back and stops in front of the user. The user then manipulate Kotōmaru's energy as the user swipes in an Uppercut motion stunning the target as the sword engulfs the user in a form a Energy Dragon. The user then comes down hard on the Opponent extending the sword to mid-range.
    -Can only be used once
    -Kotōmaru Complete ends immediatly
    -Counts as 2 moves instead of one
    `Can Only be used by Kotōmaru weilders
    The Attack (Sorry about Quality):



    ±± Declined ±± the sword wasn't approved
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Genjutsu: Taizen Ukatsu (Illusionary Technique: Blissful Ignorance)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40 (+10 for every turn active)
    Damage: N/A
    Description: This technique's primary focus is to mask the feel of pain with an illusion. After preforming the required hand seals (Snake → Ox → Tiger) the caster will set the base illusion on sight, this illusion is unnoticed, as the illusion has no appearance of any difference on the field, unknown to the victim, another illusion is centered on top of that initial illusion. This illusion will give the appearance as if they evaded the user's next attack, however whatever technique they are stationary and vulnerable to the attack. The attack, however based on the attack actually making contact, the victim is knocked out of the genjutsu through pain, which has them fall into the previously layered genjutsu on the bottom, which has the same affect. The user will feel the pain caused from the user's previous attack and realize they were in a gen, however, they will feel as though they were knocked out of it and not realize the other gen layered on top.
    ~The user is essentially layering two genjutsu on top of the other, requiring a fair amount of chakra and concentration. No other genjutsu can be used while this one is in play.
    ~Only B-ranked gen or below can be used for the next two turns after jutsu is released.
    ~Jutsu remains in affect until victim is successfully outside of each layer
    ~Any jutsu above A-rank or any lightning jutsu B-rank and above is enough to dispel both layers
    ~Dojutsu users (Byakugan 3tome Sharingan only) can successfully recognize one of the layers but not the entire illusion.


    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Multilayered genjutsu isn't something you can submit that way. OP.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Mireniamuroddo) Millennium Rod
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: N/A
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The Millennium Rod was an item created long ago and gifted to the Water Country. Though most of the Rod's fame was created through legend and not it's true abilities, it still holds great power for the wielder. The shaft of the Rod is actually a hidden scabbard, which holds a small blade the user can shoot out at will, up to mid-range. The blade of the Rod is actually a hollowed out blade, and inside of the scabbard are multiple casings which attach to bases at the end of the Rod, where the scabbard and the Rod meet, allowing the user to resheath the Rod to create a new blade, and to be able to shoot off multiple blades without running out or having to pick up a discarded one. The Rod also allows the user to see through the eye topping the Rod, allowing them to see where ever the Rod may be pointed, and protecting them from visual genjutsu.
    Note: ~Shooting a blade counts as a move




    ±± Declined ±± bolded part...why and how come? Explain it better
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by black uchiha View Post

    (Kabutomushibosu: Kingu Shinobu)The Rhinoceros Beetle Boss: King Shinobu
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user summons the King of Mt. Gen. Lord Shinobu is one of only five beetles of Mt. Gen that stands in a humanoid from. King Shinobu stands 40ft tall, with a horn extending another 10ft from his head. Shinobu hands are tipped with claws, and he has wings extending from his back for flight. Being king, Shinobu is the strongest of all the Mt. Gen beetle. He has the nature affinitie of wind using it up to S-rank. His special ability is to summon 2 of his followers (at once) to aid him in battle and reverse summon the user (within the battlefield only).
    - Can only be summoned once per battle
    - Only last 4 turns
    - Can only summon 2 followers once per battle(counts as one of the user 3 moves per turn)
    - Can only reverse summon once per battle
    - Can’t summon any other summoning after Shinobu is dispelled
    - Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract
    - Must have signed the Rhinoceros Beetle contract for 3 months


    ~Declined~ The reverse-summoning is actually an independent custom so you can't include it in your technique (it was already created).
    (Kabutomushibosu: Kingu Shinobu)The Rhinoceros Beetle Boss: King Shinobu
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user summons the King of Mt. Gen. Lord Shinobu is one of only five beetles of Mt. Gen that stands in a humanoid from. King Shinobu stands 40ft tall, with a horn extending another 10ft from his head. Shinobu hands are tipped with claws, and he has powerful wings extending from his back for flight. He is capable of flying at high speed even while carrying extra weight. Being king, Shinobu is the strongest of all the Mt. Gen beetle. He has the nature affinitie of wind using it up to S-rank, his wings adds +10 damage to the wind. His special ability is to summon 2 of his followers (at once) to aid him in battle.
    - Can only be summoned once per battle
    - Only last 4 turns
    - Wings add +10 to wind techniques
    - Can only summon 2 followers once per battle(counts as one of the user 3 moves per turn)
    - Can’t summon any other summoning after Shinobu is dispelled
    - Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract
    - Must have signed the Rhinoceros Beetle contract for 3 months


    ±± Declined ±± By summoning two other followers you mean two other beetle summons of your own? Meaning you'd have 3 summons in play at the same time? No.


    took out the reverse summoning part
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Katon: Kyanpufaia) - Fire Release: Campfire
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: After using either Crushing Toad Stomach or Toad Mouth Bind, the Giant Fire toad will via fire chakra create somewhat of a blanket of fire on itself, inside the stomach whereever it wishes to burn it's opponents alive. This doesn't happen instantly, however very fast.
    ~ Useable twice per battle.
    ~ Two turns inbetween usage.


    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. The implications and uses of this are OP. It has no restrictions.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton: Hitoshirezu Kiri Kison no Jutsu )Water Release: Hidden Mist Assassination Technique
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra cost:30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user sends water chakra underground or underwater (depending on the battlefield)and forms a water clone the same size as the user in their opponent's shadow that raises up without a sound and using the silent homicide technique slices the opponents throat.
    -Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    -Can only be used by ninjas born in the hidden mist.
    -Can only be taught by Professor Sarutobi.

    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit.


    Ancient Weapon of the Hozuki Clan Lords: Poseidon
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost:30( if needed to summon)
    Damage points: N/A (+10 to Water ninjutsu)
    Description: This weapon was created by the founding members of the Hozuki clan in the days before the 5 great village system and lost during war until the 2nd mizukage found where it had been sealed away by the 2nd hokage at the bottom of the ocean. Poseidon is a royal blue Trident made of chakra reactive metal (able to have elemental chakra flow through it) and is unbreakable. The unique ability of Poseidon is its power in the hands of those with strong water affinities, molding their water chakra inside of it and releasing it through the 3 prongs on top the way ninjas mold chakra in their bodies and release it out their chakra points. This allows the user to use water release (up to A rank) with no seals.
    -Can't use Lightning release while holding Poseidon
    -Must have water affinity and mastered water release.
    -Can only be used by Professor Sarutobi.


    ±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Why would a weapon make you use an element without hand seals? Similar swords, staffs, spears, tridents exist. The name is taken. Etc etc etc
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-26-2012 at 07:13 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Summoning Jutsu: Carbuncle Tribe (Kuchiyose no Jutsu : Carbuncle Zoku )
    Scroll Owner: AntiHero
    -Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    -Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    -Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Persian, Liepard, Luxray
    • Persian, Battle Cat

    Type: Summoning
    Rank: C
    Range: short/long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 30
    Description: Persian appearance is arguably more similar to Siamese cat than its namesake. She is as big as a Puma. The gem on its head makes it resemble a Carbuncle, a Latin-American mythological beast which had a jewel on its forehead. Her tail has a distinctive whorl at the end. Her fur is pale tan with the exception of black-rimmed ears. Perhaps her most distinctive feature is the red jewel in the center of her forehead. Many of the members of the Cat’s Ear Tribe with elemental abilities have similar jewels; Persian, however, does not demonstrate any affinities to a particular element, so this connection seems to be purely coincidental. Like 'real-life' cats, Persian is capable of retracting its claws and bringing them out again when needed, she is also very swift and can track peoples scent. Its thick whiskers are very sensitive to changes in air movements, enabling it to detect its prey by movement alone. Persian's lithe muscles also enable it to walk without making a sound.
    Note: Persian cannot use elemental jutsu.
    Note: Each jutsu Persian uses counts towards the users 3 jutsu per turn count.
    Note: Can only be summon by AntiHero and others who have signed the Carbuncle contract.
    Note: Can only be in play for 3-turns.

    • Liepard, Cruel Prankster

    Type: Summoning
    Rank: B
    Range: short/long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: Depends on the jutsu it uses.
    Description: Liepard appears to be a leopard cat, a species of wildcat that appear to have traits of both housecats and leopards. It slightly resembles a black panther, because the spots on the panther's coat can be seen if examined closely. Liepard is a slender, primarily purple-colored feline, similar to a large house cat. It has a pink "mask" patterning over its eyes, a pink nose, and small yellow "eyebrows". It has two pairs of long yellow whiskers, with the tufted underside of its body and the tips of its legs also yellow. Its body is speckled with yellow rosettes, and it has a curling tail that looks somewhat like a sickle. Liepard move silently and elegantly, preferring to take down their opponents by stealth. They sneak up behind their victims, and attack before they have a chance to react.
    Note: Liepard can turn itself into mist, having an affinity for water.
    Note: Can only use C-rank and below water jutsu.
    Note: Each jutsu Liepard uses counts towards the users 3 jutsu per turn count.
    Note: Can only be summon by AntiHero and others who have signed the Carbuncle contract.
    Note: Can only be in play for 3-turns.

    • Luxray, Intimidating Eyes

    Type: Summoning
    Rank: B
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: Depends on the jutsu it uses.
    Description: Luxray has a spiky black mane that covers its head down to its legs. Its back legs are black and blue and it has a black tail with a star-like shape on the tip. It has three rings on the backs of its legs and has red eyes. Luxray have extraordinary eyesight. It is so powerful that they can see through most objects, like x-ray vision. Luxray is extremely vicious, although very loyal to AntiHero. He can administer extreme amounts of power through electricity. Because of his flawless x-ray like vision, practically nothing can go unseen by its eyes.
    Note: Can only use Lighting jutsu C-rank and below.
    Note: Can not be harmed by lighting jutsu C-rank or below.
    Note: Each jutsu Luxray uses counts towards the users 3 jutsu per turn count.
    Note: Can only be summon by AntiHero and others who have signed the Carbuncle contract.
    Note: Can only be in play for 3-turns.

    (Mods please tell me what I have to do to get these approved if they don't)


    ±± All Declined ±± You need to first submit the contract for a correct animal that hasn't been done before. Then, once approved, you submit the animals. However, submitting the contract counts as one of your 3 weekly submissions. With the animals and the contracts you submitted 4 things at once. Also, what animal are you trying to sign?
     
         
    Last edited by Scorps; 02-26-2012 at 07:16 PM.

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