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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Summoning Animal: Bulls
    Scroll Owner: Blade Hyuga
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: Toro The Great Bull(waiting on approval)
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Zeek The Lightning Bull, Marina The Water Bull, Riko The Fire Bull, Aero The Wind Bull.(All waiting on approval)

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    I am the new owner of the bull contract so I changed somethings
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    I submitted these for the week 10/3/2011 - 10/9/2011, but they were never checked. However, as they have spoiler tags and such in them, they would have been declined anyway. Resubmitting for the new week without all the spoiler tags and such.

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    (Mikomi no Yaiba) Blade of Hope

    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90
    Description: Mikomi was forged by ancient blacksmiths, the founders of the chakra metal weapons. They were the best and this was the last and the most powerful weapon they created. The weapon his comprised by a blade made of a very special chakra metal, Mythril, that is able to change it shape (but not its mass) by responding to our chakra manipulation. To gain full power of the weapon, the user must infuse it with blood. It requires 30 damage points. Once the ritual is done, the blade will acquire a bluish white tone and the user will have the ability to change it shape.
    Due to it's material, Mikomi his extremely hard to break, but so sharp that can cut through almost anything.
    *Every time the user wants to manipulate it, he must drop 15 health*
    *Can only be held by Keotsu. The sword will became so heavy that the user will have it's bones crushed if he gets beneath, if attempted to be used by anyone else*

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    Rank: N/A
    Type: Weapon
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage: +20 to Kenjutsu
    Description: After using the first Mikomi no Yaiba, this blade’s predecessor, for years, Keotsu decided it was time to forge his own blade. Keotsu took the ancestral Mythril blade and used its shape-shifting ability to transform it into an ore that he could smelt and form his own sword with. Using a process from his home, Keotsu spent three straight days forging the blade, infusing it with his chakra and life-force as he did so. On the dawn of the forth morning, the blade gleamed in the early morning light, and was completed. Infused with the powers of the previous Mikomi no Yaiba, this blade retained the ability to change its shape, but not its mass, by responding to the wielder’s chakra manipulation – and due to this ability to change its shape, the godly edge that the previous blade held was still present after this re-forging, shown when Keotsu plunged the blade into a sheer rock face and withdrew it, the weapon unscathed. Keotsu’s forging had an adverse effect on the blade, though. It created a type of “grain” on the inside of the light blue-white metal, causing energy to flow from it one-way, meaning that if he was running his chakra through it, energy could not be put into it from an opposite direction, as the blade would act as an extreme energy insulator. Keotsu’s re-forging also had one more effect on the blade: it allowed Keotsu to amplify the chakra he used for his Kenjutsu technique, boosting their strength and allowing him to use the chakra he focused into the blade to use a short-range, splash type shockwave; that is, when swung, after charging chakra, the sword can release a mulit-directional “splash-wave” of chakra that has the same cutting capability and force behind it as the blade when swung. Due to the legendary metal from which it is forged, Mikomi no Yaiba: Mythos’s edge will never dull, and the weapon is indestructible.
    *The user can manipulate the blade’s form during battle at any time, but it costs 35 chakra to do so, and also counts towards one of that turn’s three allotted moves.
    *The sword can be summoned using the generic summoning technique, but this also counts against a turn’s move, obviously.
    *The splash wave requires a charge time, but chakra can be charged while other chakra/jutsu are being used, due to it having a neutral element; thus, it doesn’t create an imbalance within the user’s system. The wave is considered a standard A-rank jutsu, requiring 30 chakra, doing 60 damage, counting against one of the moves in a turn, and it does not receive the +20 power boost that the sword gives to Kenjutsu.
    *Can only be wielded by Keotsu. When someone else tries to hold the blade, it will reject their chakra and increase its density exponentially, making it to heavy to be lifted. However, it reverts to its original density when Keotsu is holding it.




    It's more of an upgrade than an update, but here are the immediate changes: lowered rank due to forbidden-rank weapons being outlawed; took away the self-damaging nature needed for transforming but increased the required chakra; added a boost to Kenjutsu techniques instead of the sword having an actual damage value; addition of A-ranked chakra wave;added the ability to the sword that it can be summoned to the user.

    And just a quick question: if the upgrade is declined, I get to keep the original Mikomi, correct?

    ~Declined~ There's just too many abilities there, decide which one you want to keep but lower the count. Also, if you keep the bold part, elaborate on it more. Yes you can keep your old sword if this one is declined.
    Resubmitting:

    (Mikomi no Yaiba: Mythos Jinsei no Sāberu) Blade of Hope: Mythos, the Life Sabre
    Rank: N/A
    Type: Weapon
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage: +10 to Kenjutsu
    Description: After using the first Mikomi no Yaiba, this blade’s predecessor, for years, Keotsu decided it was time to forge his own blade. Keotsu took the ancestral Mythril blade and used its shape-shifting ability to transform it into an ore that he could smelt and form his own sword with. Using a process from his home, Keotsu spent three straight days forging the blade, infusing it with his chakra and life-force as he did so. On the dawn of the forth morning, the blade gleamed in the early morning light, and was completed. Infused with the powers of the previous Mikomi no Yaiba, this blade retained the ability to change its shape, but not its mass, by responding to the wielder’s chakra manipulation – and due to this ability to change its shape, the godly edge that the previous blade held was still present after this re-forging, shown when Keotsu plunged the blade into a sheer rock face and withdrew it, the weapon unscathed. Keotsu’s re-forging had an adverse effect effect on the blade: it allowed Keotsu to amplify the chakra he used for his Kenjutsu technique, boosting their strength. Due to the legendary metal from which it is forged, Mikomi no Yaiba: Mythos’s edge will never dull, and the weapon is indestructible, and the weapon's scabbard -also imbued with Mythril -changes to fit the blade.
    *The user can manipulate the blade’s form during battle at any time, but it costs 35 chakra to do so, and also counts towards one of that turn’s three allotted moves.
    *Can only be wielded by Keotsu. When someone else tries to hold the blade, it will reject their chakra and increase its density exponentially, making it to heavy to be lifted. However, it reverts to its original density when Keotsu is holding it.

    Removed the bolded, and the A-ranked wave, along with the ability to be summoned. Only addition bolded, though.

    ~Approved~ Made the boost +10

    UPDATES:

    Samurai Art: Torrent Beyond the Heavens (Samurai Gijutsu: Se Tengai)
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Range: Long(for rain) - Short- Medium (for attack)
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Cost: 80
    Description: Holding their blade sideways, the Samurai will run Water Chakra through their blade, activating the technique. A great downpour will come over the terrain, providing water for this technique, as well as dropping all Fire Justu down one rank, and reducing their damage by 10. A ring of water will form around the Samurai with a radius equal to that of the complete wingspan of the Samurai (meaning it would be roughly 10-11 feet [roughly 3.2 meters] in diameter). This ring has a single tentacle for each of the eight points of the Compass Rose: North, South, West, East, Northeast, Northwest, Southeast, and Southwest. The tentacles will strike at anything within range as the Samurai commands them, but they do not attack on their own; they are approximately 5 feet [1.5 meters] long, and the Samurai must know the general vicinity of the opponent(s) to strike them if they are behind him/her.
    *As long as the rain continues to fall, or if there is an ample water source nearby, this technique remains in effect. The maximum, however, is four turns.
    *Only once per battle.

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    (Kamei Gigei: Suiretsusen) Command Art: Water Fury Flash
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Range: Long(for rain) - Short- Medium (for attack)
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Cost: 80
    Description: Holding their blade sideways, the user will run Suiton chakra through their blade, activating the technique. A great downpour will come over the terrain, providing water for this technique, as well as dropping all Fire Justu down one rank, and reducing their damage by 10. A ring of water will form around the user with a radius equal to that of the complete wingspan of the user (meaning it would be roughly 10-11 feet [roughly 3.2 meters] in diameter). This ring has a single tentacle for each of the eight points of the Compass Rose: North, South, West, East, Northeast, Northwest, Southeast, and Southwest. The tentacles will strike at anything within range as the user commands them, but they do not attack on their own; they are approximately 5 feet [1.5 meters] long, and the user must know the general vicinity of the opponent(s) to strike them if they are behind him/her.
    *As long as the rain continues to fall, or if there is an ample water source nearby, this technique remains in effect. The maximum, however, is four turns.
    *Only once per battle.

    Changed name, changed "Water" to Suiton, and removed all instances of the word "Samurai" and replaced it with "user" (the jutsu was made before the Samurai were given RP restrictions, and thus is unusable in it's current state.)

    (Samurai Gijutsu: Amatsu Taiga) Samurai Art: Heavenly River
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short – Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will run Raiton chakra through their blade while holding it skyward, to activate this technique. This technique fills the air with energy – so much so, that Doton jutsu fall one rank (due to the charges in the air disrupting the formation as the energy disperses into the earth), and that a lightning bolt continuously streaks from the user’s sword, enveloping it in electricity, to the sky. Though meant as a Support technique, using the lightning to augment physical and water element attacks or by creative means, this technique is not without its own offensive measure. Once per turn, the user can swing their blade, and send a bolt of lightning flying in the direction of their swing – the energy is discharged from the constantly streaking bolt that originates from the blade, though this can only be done twice, and not on consecutive turns, due for the need for the electricity to replenish.
    *The lightning can only be fired once per turn, every other turn.
    *This jutsu last for four turns before the electricity dissipates, and all modifiers are returned to normal.
    *Only once per battle.
    *Raiton cannot be used for two turns after this jutsu ends, due to the air being unable to hold a charge after being supersaturated with energy.

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    (Kamei Gigei: Raikōsen) Command Art: Lightning Ray Flash
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Supplementary
    Range: Short – Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user will run Raiton chakra through their blade while holding it skyward, to activate this technique. This technique fills the air with energy – so much so, that Doton jutsu fall one rank (due to the charges in the air disrupting the formation as the energy disperses into the earth), and that a lightning bolt continuously streaks from the user’s sword, enveloping it in electricity, to the sky. Though meant as a Support technique, using the lightning to augment physical and water element attacks or by creative means, this technique is not without its own offensive measure. Once per turn, the user can swing their blade, and send a bolt of lightning flying in the direction of their swing – the energy is discharged from the constantly streaking bolt that originates from the blade, though this can only be done twice, and not on consecutive turns, due for the need for the electricity to replenish.
    *The lightning can only be fired once per turn, every other turn.
    *This jutsu last for four turns before the electricity dissipates, and all modifiers are returned to normal.
    *Only once per battle.
    *Raiton cannot be used for two turns after this jutsu ends, due to the air being unable to hold a charge after being supersaturated with energy.

    Changed name.

    (Kamei Gigei: Shinkirou Ken) Command Art: Mirage Blade
    Rank: A
    Range: Short – Mid
    Type: Attack
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: Unlike other Kenjutsu Shockwaves which are generally large, Mirage Blade is a small shockwave that’s size is the same as the blade length of the sword used to launch it. Sacrificing power for speed and quantity, Mirage Blade travels at a speed traceable only by 2 Tome Sharingan users and above – experienced Shinobi can also track this attack without a Doujutsu. A large amount of chakra is focused inside the blade in a massive wave. Though the chakra should pour out of the user’s sword, a shell of chakra formed around the blade causes the chakra to rebound infinitely inside the actual blade of the sword. When the user slashes their blade it releases some of this chakra in a white, rippling shockwave; thus the name Mirage Blade. Mirage Blade also carries the properties of the blade used to fire it, as well as its size; this means that if the blade used to fire Mirage Blade is sharp enough, Mirage Blade will pass through solid objects by slicing them in half and continuing on, much like a Wind element jutsu would.
    *Mirage Blade is not Fuuton element, the comparison to a Fuuton jutsu takes into account an extremely sharp blade.
    *Three shockwaves can be fired per use.
    *This attack does 40 damage to the opponent’s health and the other 20 points is subtracted from their chakra total.
    *Useable three times per battle, though if the user does not launch all three shockwaves in one turn the shockwaves can be launched at a later time; no more than 9 shockwaves via this technique may be used in a battle.
    *Cannot be refreshed on consecutive turns.
    *Shockwave is traceable by people with 2-tome or higher Sharingan, or by S-rank and above ninja.
    *Useable and taught by Keotsu only.

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    (Kamei Gigei: Kougenjin) Command Art: Mirage Blade
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 20 each
    Description: Unlike other Kenjutsu shockwaves which are generally large, Kougenjin is a relatively small shockwave that’s size is the same as the blade length of the sword used to launch it. Sacrificing power for speed and quantity, Mirage Blade travels at an incredible pace, relative to the user’s rank; Mirage Blade, when used by a Sannin, would be about twice as fast as a shockwave fired from the Samurai Sabre Technique, though its destructive force is obviously much less. A large amount of chakra is focused inside the user’s blade in the form of a constant flow – though normally the chakra could envelope the sword, here the chakra creates a shell on the inside of the blade, allowing the chakra to rebound infinitely and resonate with itself. When the user slashes their sword, it releases a portion of this chakra in the form of a white, rippling shockwave; thus the name Mirage Blade. Mirage Blade also carries the properties of the blade used to fire it, as well as its size; this means that if the blade used to fire Mirage Blade is sharp enough, Mirage Blade will pass through solid objects by slicing them in half and continuing on, much like a Wind element jutsu would.
    *Mirage Blade is not Fuuton element, the comparison to a Fuuton jutsu takes into account an extremely sharp blade.
    *Three shockwaves can be fired per use.
    *This jutsu may be only be used 3 times per match.
    *Useable and taught by Keotsu only.

    Changed to actual translation; changed damage, as previously it did 40 actual damage and 20 chakra damage - I took that out, and now each shockwave does strictly and evenly 20 damage individually; removed both usage limits, as now canon shockwaves that are much more powerful exist and can be used without limits - being much weaker than either the SSS or the Crimson Wave, I don't suppose they need a limit. I also changed the speed from "traceable by Shinobi with 2-tome or higher Sharingan/S-class ninja" to a speed that adjusts with the user's rank. Increased range.

    New Submission: ---

    ~All Approved~ I did put a restriction on the usage of the last one while changing the stockpiling ability.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-22-2011 at 01:41 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Raiton: Keshigomu No Kyanon)- Lightning Release: Eraser Cannon
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:First to use this jutsu the user must gather great amount of his raiton chakra from all his body then he channel it into his palm to form a bright-yellow Chakra sphere. Next, he waves his hand forward and fires the attack at the opponent, inflicting a large amount of damage.
    -can only be used by -Kamishiro-
    -can only be used 3 times per turn
    -must master raiton and aact
    -can't use any raiton jutsu at the same turn
    -can't use any raiton jutsu higher than b rank for two turns after he make this
    -can't use any forbidden technique at the same turn

    (Raiton: Auraisu No disuku)- Lightning Release: Destructo Disk
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:The Destructo Disk is a razor-sharp disk of Lightning chakra that can slice through nearly anything; its main weaknesses are that it is generally slow to create, it lacks accuracy, and it can't be guided once it is thrown but a forbidden doton or s rank doton can block it. to use it first the user gather great amount of his chakra then he channel it into his hand he raises his hand into the air then he release the chakra creating a huge lightning disk that has the same size as rasenshuriken
    -can only be used by -kamishiro-
    -must mastered raiton and aact
    -can only be used 2 times per turn
    -can use any lightning attack on the same turn
    -can't use any lightning attack higher than b rank for two turns

    (Katon:Honoo Shouten No Butoukai)- Fire Release: Flaming Death Ball
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:First the user raises his hands above his head and then he gather great amount of his katon chakra after that he release it creating huge fire ball. When he fires it at the opponent, the attack's color changes to dark red and has a flaming coating surrounding it, inflicting greater damage through a powerful flaming explosion.
    -can only be used by -Kamishiro-
    -can't use any katon attack at the same turn
    -can only be used 3 times per turn
    -can't use katon attack higher than a rank for two turns
    -must mastered katon and AACT

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    Red Queen |Gosai Kisaki
    Type: weapon
    Rank: s rank
    Range: short/long
    Chakra Cost: 50 (+ 15 For each lightning technique sense and + 5 for evey lightning jutsu return)
    Damage: (30 for any normal attack ) ( + 20 for any lightning attack)
    Description: The Red Queen is customized version of blades ,It has an ornately etched base , but it's most unique feature is that it has been specially customized to make the user able to control all the b rank lightning or above means that if the opponent made b rank lightning jutsu the user can re throw it with the blade to the opponent,Also as long as the user have it he earn 15 boost to every lightning jutsu ,And as it made of special blade it can sense s rank lightning jutsu or above
    -Can only be used by -Kamishiro- or who is alowed to use it
    -can sense lightning jutsud 4 times per battle
    -must master lightning and AACT
    -must be a kage or sage to use it as it need alot of experiences to use it
    -the user take 5 damage when he return lightning attack
    -the user take 10 damage when he sense lightning attack

    ~All Declined~ I've been giving enough warning about this, if you don't submit your customs in a plain way (no font, size, spoilers(except for pictures), code) then it'll be declined. Make it as easy to read as possible and make it look good once it's approved and in your personal thread.

    Resubmitting i removed the bolded thing and changed the weapons as it was made by some one else also i made some changes on bolde

    (Raiton: Keshigomu No Kyanon)- Lightning Release: Eraser Cannon
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:First to use this jutsu the user must gather great amount of his raiton chakra from all his body then he channel it into his palm to form a bright-yellow Chakra sphere ,the size of it is the same as 2 rasengan. Next, he waves his hand forward and fires the attack at the opponent, the lightning will go towards the opponent till it reaches short range to him then it explode inflicting a large amount of damage.
    -can only be used by -Kamishiro-
    -can only be used 3 times per turn
    -must master raiton and aact
    -can't use any raiton jutsu at the same turn
    -can't use any raiton jutsu higher than b rank for two turns after he make this
    -can't use any forbidden technique at the same turn

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Katon:Honoo Shouten No Butoukai)- Fire Release: Flaming Death Ball
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description:First the user raises his hands above his head and then he gather great amount of his katon chakra after that he release it creating huge fire ball , the same as the tailed beast bomb then as he is ready ,he fires the flame ball to go towards the opponent ,but the ball don't go towards the opponent directly ,the user first shoot it to the sky then as it reach the mid air it drop into the opponent's face and as it reach the opponent's face it explode making a rain of flame that have the same effect of lava when it touches the body of the opponent.
    -can only be used by -Kamishiro-
    -can't use any katon attack at the same turn
    -can only be used 3 times per turn
    -can't use katon attack higher than a rank for two turns
    -must mastered katon and AACT

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    CW
    Magnam | Koushoku Tenma
    Type: weapon
    Rank: S rank
    Range: short/long
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+ 15 For each lightning technique sense and + 5 for evey lightning jutsu return)
    Damage: (30 for any normal attack ) ( + 10 for any lightning attack)
    Description: Magnam is is customized version of blades ,It has an ornately etched base , but it's most unique feature is that it has been specially customized so as long as the user have it he earn 10 boost to every lightning jutsu ,and as the blade made of special blade it has lightning surrounds the sword making it able to cut any a lightning attack or above,Also the user when he grap it into his hand and hold hit he channel lightning chakra into his hand so as the sword made of metals [special metal] the chakra will be channeld into the sword and by that the user will be able to manipulate the lightning charka on it so by that he can make Radiation from the sword making it sense and lightning jutsu A ranks or above
    -Can only be used by -Kamishiro- & ~Yard~or who they alowed to use it
    -can sense lightning jutsud 4 times per battle
    -must master lightning and AACT
    -must be a kage or sage to use it as it need alot of experiences to use it
    -the user take 5 damage when he return lightning attack
    -can cut lightning attacks for 3 times
    -the user take 10 damage when he sense lightning attack
    -must take the permission from yard and kamishiro to use it


    ~Declined~ Grossly OP. Cutting through any lightning? Manipulating lightning on your sword to cause RADIATION, sensing ability and shooting A-rank lightning blast? And a boost to all lightning jutsus you do on top lol. If it isn't severely adjusted in your re-submission I'll decline it for good.

    new submission
    |Fuuton : Suraisu No Kaze | Wind Release : Slicing Wind
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: short/long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: 80 - 90
    Description: The user gather great amount of his fuuton chakra then as he has good amount of fuuton chakra he release the chakra to combine with the air then he suddnely turn all the air that surround the opponent into slicing wind that cut any thing it touches
    -can only be used 3 times per turn
    - must master fuuton
    -can't use any fuuton attack on the same turn
    -can't use any fuuton custom for 3 turns
    -can't use fuuton techniques higher than b rank for 2 turns
    -The user don't take any damage
    - count as 2 attacks

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    Summoning Animal: Chameleon
    Scroll Owner: -Kamishiro-
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
    summoning tattoo :


    ~Declined~ Contract already exist, it just isn't posted in the official summon list.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Haruka)-Haruka
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    For this jutsu the user bites his thumb and then draws blood which he wipes on his palms and then slams the fist together and summons Haruka the ringtail who fancies herself as the mistress of earth. Haruka is an extremely well mannered ringtail and she is extremely skilled in using the earth element. She is twice the size of a normal human being in terms of height and with proportionate other features. She is extremely skilled at burrowing through the earth and moving extremely quickly inside the earth (the speed is similar to that of a shark while it swims) . She is so skilled at burrowing that there are not even small vibrations while she is burrowing and there is no trace left at the point that she burrows. She is able to take one shinobi wrapped in the fur of her bushy tail into the earth to travel long distances her tail masks all the chakra signals of that shinobi.
    -can be summoned twice per battle.
    -remains on the battle field for three turns in a row.
    -she is able to use earth jutsu upto B rank.

    ~Declined~ This needs lots of restrictions, merging with the ground ain't something natural to do, it need to be performed as a jutsu and from what I read, she can use it at will and it doesn't count toward your 3 jutsu per turn. Also, work on the bold part.
    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Haruka)-Haruka
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    For this jutsu the user bites his thumb and then draws blood which he wipes on his palms and then slams the fist together and summons Haruka the ringtail who fancies herself as the mistress of earth. Haruka is an extremely well mannered ringtail and she is extremely skilled in using the earth element. She is twice the size of a normal human being in terms of height and with proportionate other features. She also has a set of two knives strapped in an X pattern to her back. She is extremely skilled at burrowing through the earth and moving extremely quickly inside the earth (the speed is similar to that of a shark while it swims) . She is so skilled at burrowing that there are not even small vibrations while she is burrowing and there is no trace left at the point that she burrows.
    -can be summoned twice per battle.
    -can move through earth only two times whenever she is summoned. Doing so counts toward the user's 3 moves per turn.
    -remains on the battle field for three turns in a row.
    -she is able to use earth jutsu upto B rank.

    Note: Removed the part where she is able to take a shinobi with her and added the change in bold.

    ~Approved~ Added the part where merging with the ground counts toward your 3 moves.

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    (Hyouton: Tōketsu/ tōketsu kaijo)-Freeze/Unfreeze.
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    For this jutsu the user by using his control over ice release is able to Freeze any water jutsu performed by him in the same turn and further alter the shape of the water in any form that he wants during the semi solid state when it is transforming from water to ice. Also the user can de-freeze any ice release jutsu performed by the user in the same turn causing it to turn into water and therefore further manipulate it using his water nature chakra manipulation.
    -when manipulating water or ice the user can transform it into the shapes of animals or mythical creatures...or any shape that suits his needs.
    -this jutsu can be used Four times in a battle.

    ~Declined~ Declined please explain to me how you'd unfreeze ice using your ICE kekkei genkai? Also, so shape manipulation of elements.
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    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Ketsugō gijutsu||Piasu)-Binding art||Piercing
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    For this jutsu the user bites his thumb and draws blood and clapping his hands together summons ringtails surrounding his opponent in a circular fashion. But the trick here is that nearly all the ringtails appeared are like shadow clones or illusions. And the real ringtail is hidden somewhere among these. All these clones/illusions are exactly similar in there looks and each has a sharp spear crackling with electricity in his hand also all of them are of the size of humans maybe a just a tad bit larger. The instant they are summoned all of them simultaneously make a spear thrusting action towards the opponent (who will be at the center of the circle formed by the ringtails). So logically all the illusions or copies wont hurt the opponent but the real ringtail hiding in these copies uses the chance to pierce the opponent through his blind side.
    -Any doujutsu user like the sharingan or the Byakugan is able to tell the difference between the real ringtails and the illusions. The trick here is to cover 360 degrees of vision.
    -Must hold the ringtail summoning contract and the move is unique to ringtails.
    -Can be used thrice per battle.
    -Summon poofs away immediately afterwards.

    ~Declined~ All summon are to be summoned next to the user, you can't summon your ringtails next to your opponent.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Ranton:Arashi bakuha) Storm Release: Storm Explosion
    Rank:C
    Range:Short
    Type: Attack
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will do 2 handseals, then create orb of storm, that appears within short range of the user. The orb the explodes, but because it is infused with the users chakra, he directs it at the enemy and not at himself.

    ~Declined~ Re-read your description, I don't understand the bold part.

    (Ranton: Arashi Kire) Storm Release: Storm Slice
    Rank: C
    Range: Mid
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will sling their hand forward releasing a slash of storm at the opponent or object.

    ~Declined~ Make it B-rank, call it a "crescent shaped storm projectile" and not a slash, and add restrictions.

    (Ranton) Storm Style
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Mid
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user creates small amounts of Storm to make various items such as shields, swords, pillars, or any other helpful item.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Either submit those individually with the appropriate ranking and restrictions or give it up.

    (Ranton: Genwaku Ranpu) Storm Release: Blinding Light
    Rank: C
    Range: Mid
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user does 1 handseal, creating a blinding light that illuminates form the user's body, blinding the opponent. In conjunction, the user sends out a wave of electricity, that will momentarily stun the opponent.

    ~Declined~ Storm release is a combination of Water and Lightning, where's the Water? This is a simple Lightning jutsu which's been done countless times.

    (Ranton: Minichua Nokogiris) Storm Release: Miniature Saws
    Rank: C
    Range: Mid
    Type:Attack
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will slam both hands on the ground, sending their Storm chakra underneath the ground, to the opponent. Immediately miniature storm saws will erupt from the ground under the opponent, attempting to cut them.

    ~Declined~ Seriously, what were you trying to do by making them all C-rank, some of those jutsu are obviously of higher ranking. Make this one A-rank, take out the part about it being immediate, make the saws travel in the ground from your location to your opponent's. Add restrictions.
    (Ranton:Arashi bakuha) Storm Release: Storm Explosion
    Rank:C
    Range:Short
    Type: Attack
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will do 2 handseals, then create orb of storm, that appears within short range of the user. The orb the explodes, but because it is infused with the users chakra, he is able to redirect the explosion outwards, meaning in front of him in a crescent shape, which will only affect the opponent.
    Note: Stuns enemy on contact
    Note: Usable 5x


    ~Declined~ Description is still messy. Also, an explosion affect both user and opponent, if you're going to make it explode in front of you then you should also be paralyzed and damaged.

    (Ranton: Wangetsu Kata Ranton Kyodan) Storm Release: Crescent Shaped Storm Projectile
    Rank:B
    Range: Mid
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will sling their hand forward releasing a crescent shaped projectile of storm at the opponent or object.
    Note: Usable 4x

    ~Approved~ Check the bold part.

    (Ranton: Minichua Nokogiris) Storm Release: Miniature Saws
    Rank: A
    Range: Mid
    Type: Attack
    Chakra: 20
    Damage: 40
    Description: The user will slam both hands on the ground, sending their Storm chakra underneath the ground, to the opponent. The user will manipulate the chakra, changing it into miniature saw, that will travel under the ground, until they're right beneathe the opponent. They will then erupt from the ground under the opponent, cutting them severely.
    Note: The ground around them will crack, creating fissures on the surface between the user and his opponent as the saws move toward him.
    Note: Takes 3 seconds to travel under ground
    Note: Usable 3x


    ~Approved~ Added a restriction.

    (Genjutsu: Rosuto Oite Sono Kumo)-Illusion Technique: Lost In The Clouds
    Type:Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:25
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:The user will do a row of 3 handseals, then points directly at the oppoent, casting the opponent in a genjutsu, where clouds suddenly surround the opponent. The opponent will wander the clouds for hours, to no avail. Can trap up to 3 opponents in the genjutsu. The opponent will be standing, staring directly in front of him without being able to perceive it's surrounding while under this genjutsu, allowing one to attack.
    Note: Usable 2 per battle
    Note: Opponent/Opponents will be sleep for one turn
    Note: Can't use Genjutsu next turn

    ~Approved~ Check the bold part.

    (Genjutsu: Mugen Raikou)- Illusion Technique: Infinite Lightning
    Type:Attack
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: The user will do a row of 5 handseal, then cast the opponent under a genjutsu, where the opponent is restricted to a certain area, where they will continuously be struck by lightning for several days. The opponent will drop to the ground in pain.
    Note: The opponent will be sleep for 2 turns
    Note: No Genjutsu for the rest of match

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Tsukuyomi rip-off.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    New Submissions for the week starting today 10/10/11

    Summoning:

    (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Haka Sono Shiranai Tori )- Summoning: Tomb of the Unknown Avian
    Type:Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    This is a highly advanced summon invented by "Sacrifice". The user must carry a large scroll that looks and is carried the same way Jiraiya carries his. When the time comes to use this summon, the user will open the scroll on the ground, preform 3 handseals, then slam their hand in the middle of the scroll. Instantly a tall, thick, 20 foot pillar appears with hieroglyphics all over the tomb, the hieroglyphics glow from the start and the top of this tomb blows open as if something has shattered the top of tomb. A skeletal gull appears to rise out of the top, he has some pitch black feathers that are still attached to his wings. The gull only sits half way out of the tomb, seeing his head and wings. Once the tomb appears and the top instantly breaks open, it shoots out a thick fog that covers the battlefield instantly covering the user and then the whole field (aspect of Hidden Mist). The only thing the target can see is the intensely bright red eyes of the Skeletal Gull; these red eyes have special abilities. It's near impossible for the target not to see the eyes because how they shine and reflect it's light in the fog, the target goes under a very intense S-Rank Genjutsu, this Genjutsu makes the target see themselves in an ancient city on the side of misty, haunted mountain. They picture themselves walking through this city, with nobody around, the city is run down, the target can hear the wails of lost spirits. In the real world, the target walks around aimlessly while under the Genjutsu open for attacks. The Gull eyes have another ability, it is able to see the enemy through the fog he unleashed earlier, this allowing him to fire sharp bones directly at the target or any other objects within the mist.

    Notes:
    - Summon lasts 4 turns
    - Only usable once per battle
    - Fog lasts while summon is on field (or until a strong wind blows it away)
    - Genjutsu acts as one of the three turns
    - Though Gull can see target the user is still unable to see the target
    - Sharp bones share the same rules as kunais/shurkiens
    - Max 3 sharp bones per turn
    - Tomb has to be destroyed first (B-Rank & up) before the gull can be directly attacked (A-Rank & up)
    - Unable to use another summon while Tomb is on field
    - Only usable by signers of Gull contract
    - Only usable by Sacrifice.. & those he allows

    ~Declined~ You're kind of missing the point on how a genjutsu works. I affects all your senses, so you can make your opponent see himself walk around this creepy town you're creating in the genjutsu, but you can't actually force him to really walk through it. Same goes for what's happening outside the genjutsu, you can't say your opponent will start walking as if he was in the genjutsu.

    Secondly, what is this gull? If it's a dead one then it needs to be changed, we don't allow any form of Impure World Resurrection jutsu. Also, how can it throw bones? Is it related to Kaguya?

    You say in your restriction that the gull can see the opponent but yet the opponent can't see it. Didn't you made it very clear that because the gulls eyes were so bright, they could be see from anywhere withing the mist (as long as you're looking in the right direction)? If you mean they would reflect on the mist then take that out, I won't accept that as it's OP.

    Take out the part where you specify what is required to kill the summon. I'm ok with destroying the tomb first, and the restriction on the rank required is fine, but summons can't be restricted to a specific rank considering there's many way to hurt them (the tomb is made form solid rock so it's your decision on the rank, the summon is a living being, it's different).

    That's about it O__O.



    Paper Techniques;

    (Muttsu Juuoku Kibaku Kujo) - Six Billion Exploding Tag Destruction
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90
    Description:
    This is Konan's ultimate Paper Technique that she used against Madara but this one is preformed differently. Konan will take out a Scroll and preform 3 hand seals then slam her hand on the scroll. In doing this she is able to summon her "Six Billion Paper Exploding Tags". As soon as it's summoned she is able to form it to a massive Tsunami of the paper tags. The Tsunami is then sent to the direct of the target. Since the astronomical amount of tags sent at the target, when it crashes down it creates a sea of tags. Konan is able to let the Tags explode for 10 minutes straight in the area. This technique is nearly unavoidable by the sheer amount of destruction, The amount of tags and force it contains makes it almost impossible to stop fully . Due to the large amount of chakra it takes to preform this move, Konan is hit with severe fatigue.

    Notes:

    - Only usable by Konan
    - Only usable once per battle
    - Unable to preform an Paper techniques for 3 turns afterwards
    - Only able to use 2 techniques in the move this is used
    - Due to huge strain on the user for 2 turns after technique used, Konan is only able to preform 2 techniques in each turn
    - Only usable/trainable by Sacrifice..

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Never ever submit cannon technique, I'll only say this one, next time it's a 2 week ban from the thread. If you want a cannon to be made, talk to Zenryoku. He'll either make it or explain why it wasn't incorporated in the RP.

    (Pe-Pa Gikou: Koudo Kami Bunshin) - Paper Technique: Advanced Paper Clone
    Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    The user is able to summon Paper clone but these clones are much more advanced. The paper clones are able to preform paper techniques and elements the user is able to preform. Other than that they act like normal Shadow clones.

    Notes:
    - Only usable by Paper Technique user
    - Usable twice per battle
    - Two clones maximum at one time
    - The move Clone preforms counts as 1 of 3 moves
    - Only usable/trainable by Sacrifice..

    ~Approved~ That's a waste of a custom in my opinion, it's an exact copy of the shadow clones. (Shadow clones can perform paper techniques if you have the right bio).

    Custom Weapon

    (Tsuchi Kumori Cestus) - The Earth Shadows Cestus
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    This is an ancient Cestus (battle gloves) passed down from the greatest earth users in the Ninja World. There was a secret society known as the "Masons of Earth" this is the society that created the Cestus and the one who past it down to the leaders of this group. Nobody knows for sure who is apart of this society, but it is said many shinobi from Iwagakure are apart of this group as well as from all the hidden villages. Though this Cestus is simple in appearance, it harnesses the greatest of the Earth's prowess. When the wielder wears both gloves, they create an internal link in the user which allows them to increases their fist power, like "Hardening" technique but just by wearing the Cestus. It also allows the user to have their Earth techniques increased in power. This Cestus has specialty techniques that harness the Earth only if wearing these gloves (separate jutsus)

    Abilities/Restrictions:
    - Earth techniques power increases by +5
    - While wearing gloves; fists get as much power as "Hardening Technique"
    - Able to deflect one A-Rank and up water style per battle (counts as move)
    - Able to deflect two B-Rank and below water style per battle (counts as move)
    - Drains chakra every turn worn. (-10)
    - Only usable by Sacrifice..


    ~Approved~ Finally some originality with a CW.

    (Tsuchi Kumori Kasane Roppou) - Earth Shadows Pile Up
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    While wearing "The Earth Shadows Cestus" the user with literally put his hands into the ground like he's grabbing it. He then pulls up a large amount of Earth from the ground about10 feet high and 20 feet wide. Then they slam they earth back into the ground with such force and power that from that point of the earth being slammed into the ground, the ground will erupt upwards with several spikes that move in a wave from short to mid-range. The spikes go up about 15 feet high.

    Notes:
    - Must wear "The Earth Shadows Centus"
    - Unable to use another Doton tech in same move
    - Only usable by Sacrifice..

    ~Declined~ Please elaborate on the technique, do the spikes emerge all around the user or in a specific direction (range would be the width of the wall and up to mid?).
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Hyouton: Kōri no sapuraizu | Ice Release: Ice Surprise
    Type: Offensive, Defensive, Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user channels a large amount of very dense, concentrated Hyouton chakra all over his body. Immediately as he releases it, a large amount of different shapes protrude from his body. Using shape manipulation he can make spikes, swords, maces, shields, hands and other ninja tools. Those tools can be made from any part of users body and they can also combine with Taijutsu.
    Note: Only five times per battle and once per turn
    Note: No Forbidden rank Ice jutsus same and next turn
    Note: Only McRazor can use this


    Hyouton: Aisu o takameyou | Ice Release: Elevating Ice
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30 (-5 for each turn)
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: While the field is on ice, user creates up to three stepping stones. They are about one meter in diameter and each of them can be shaped up to users free will. Using Fuuton chakra they can elevate the user really quick into the air and they can also catch the user if he is in free fall. They protrude from the ground very quickly and without warning. As Fuuton is already required for Hyouton there is no additional Fuuton infusion needed to make them levitate. They stay on the field until the user releases them. However, they can stay on the field only up to four turns.
    Note: Only three times per battle and once per turn
    Note: Stones last up to four turns
    Note: Only McRazor can use this


    Hyouton: Fubuki | Ice Release: Snowstorm
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: This technique is an advanced version of (Hyouton no Jutsu) - Ice Release Technique. User simply channels a great amount of Hyouton chakra into the clouds and makes a snowstorm. The snow is falling heavily onto the battlefield and it requires only one turn to completely cover the battlefield and serve as a resource for Hyouton jutsus. While the snow is falling, vision is drastically reduced and it's almost impossible for both, the opponent and user, to see each other (unless Dojutsu users). Due to his chakra being infused in each snowflake, user can sense every movement on the battlefield.
    Note: Only three times per battle
    Note: Only McRazor can use this


    Quote Originally Posted by McRazor View Post
    Hyouton: Mizu no hentai | Ice Release: Water transformation
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: +20
    Description: After the user released a Suiton jutsu he immediately releases a Hyouton chakra wave. The wave is very fast and it catches up with the previous Suiton jutsu before it hits the target. It carries very cold air which freezes any body of water on contact. It doesn't require any handseals but it can't be used unless a Suiton jutsu is used previously. When the cold air wave freezes the water, its structure changes and forms into hexagonal prisms which make the attack deadlier. As the body of water is frozen it’s powered up for a whole rank. Note that an S-ranked Suiton jutsu doesn't become Forbidden but instead a very strong S-rank jutsu.
    Note: Can only be used after a Suiton jutsu is performed.
    Note. Can only be used three times per battle.
    Note: Can only be used by Hyouton users.
    Note. Can only be taught by McRazor.


    ~Declined~ Why would an attack become more powerful as it turns to ice? Also, change the description; such a wave of cold air could freeze your opponent on the spot if it was able to freeze a body of water.
    Hyouton: Mizu no hentai | Ice Release: Water transformation
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: +20 to Suiton jutsu
    Description: After the user released a Suiton jutsu he immediately releases a Hyouton chakra wave. The wave is very fast and it catches up with the previous Suiton jutsu before it hits the target. It carries very cold air which freezes any body of water on contact. The air wave is cold enough to freeze water but still not enough cold to harm a living being (because the freezing point of water is 0°C). It doesn't require any handseals but it can't be used unless a Suiton jutsu is used previously. When the cold air wave freezes the water, its structure changes and forms into hexagonal prisms which make the attack solid. Due to the attack being solid it’s powered up for a whole rank. Note that an S-ranked Suiton jutsu doesn't become Forbidden but instead a very strong S-rank jutsu.
    Note: Can only be used after a Suiton jutsu is performed
    Note. Can only be used three times per battle
    Note: Can only be used by Hyouton users
    Note. Can only be taught by McRazor


    Quote Originally Posted by McRazor View Post
    Tsuru Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Aoi Yūgure | Crane Summoning Technique: The Blue Dusk
    Type: Attack/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short (Long on abilities)
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The Blue Dusk is a big Blue Crane. This crane is pale blue-gray in color with a white crown, a pink bill, and long, dark gray wingtip feathers which trail to the ground. She is the queen of all cranes and a mastermind of perverseness. Her majestic looks contrast highly with her dirty mind. She has a wingspan of fifteen meters and can fly at high speeds with two humans on her back. Her main asset however is her agility and her Suiton chakra nature that both give birth to her abilities. While flying she is very quick and agile. Her chakra is constantly pulsing, thus being released into the field. As it's mixed with the air it reacts to water molecules and moist which allows her to feel everything around her up to long range. Due to her affinity to Suiton she can use it for both attack and defense. When attacking she exhales a high volume S-Rank spiraling stream of water, enough to flood most of the battlefield which can serve also as a water source for the rest of the match. When defending she creates a S-Rank spherical water shield around her and the user. She is also immune to water below B-Rank and fire up to B-Rank. Her jutsus count towards the three jutsus per turn.
    Note: Can use Suiton only four times per battle due to limited chakra resource
    Note: Jutsus performed by the summon count towards three per turn
    Note: Stays on field for turns
    Note: Must sign the Crane Summoning contract
    Note: Summoning Boss


    ~Declined~ This ability to sense others through the moisture in the air was already made through a CJ. It would be ripping it off to accept this summon of yours. You know what to do.
    Tsuru Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Aoi Yūgure | Crane Summoning Technique: The Blue Dusk
    Type: Attack/Defensive/Supplementary
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short (Long on abilities)
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The Blue Dusk is a big Blue Crane. This crane is pale blue-gray in color with a white crown, a pink bill, and long, dark gray wingtip feathers which trail to the ground. She is the queen of all cranes and a mastermind of perverseness. Her majestic looks contrast highly with her dirty mind. She has a wingspan of fifteen meters and can fly at high speeds with two humans on her back. Her main asset however is her agility and her Suiton chakra nature that both give birth to her abilities. While flying she is very quick and agile. Her chakra is constantly pulsing, thus being released into the field. As it gets released into the air it forms very little bubbles of water which are not able to be seen with a bare eye. As the bubbles get in contact with anything, they pop and immediately notify Aoi. This gives her the ability to sense anything that is happening on the battlefield up to long range. Due to her affinity to Suiton she can use it for both attack and defense. When attacking she exhales a high volume S-Rank spiraling stream of water, enough to flood most of the battlefield which can serve also as a water source for the rest of the match. When defending she creates a S-Rank spherical water shield around her and the user. She is also immune to water below B-Rank and fire up to B-Rank. Her jutsus count towards the three jutsus per turn.
    Note: Can use Suiton only four times per battle
    Note: Jutsus performed by the summon count towards three per turn
    Note: Her sensing ability doesn't count towards user's three jutsu per turn
    Note: Stays on field four turns
    Note: Must sign the Crane Summoning contract
    Note: Summoning Boss


    ~All Declined~ I will not accept any jutsu that use font, size change, aligned/centered text or spoilers for anything else then pictures. Re-submit in a more readable way.
    Thank you.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by -Mugen- View Post
    sorry I really didnt.
    I'll edit it than ^_^

    (Kyousei-Katana no Netsu Seijin ) Great Sword of the Temperature Sage
    Rank: S
    Type: weapon
    Range:N/a
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: It is said this sword was once wielded by one of the family members of the Rokuddu Sage that possessed a ability to control temperature.Being constantly infused with that sages chakra,the sword actually inherited the ability.It is also said that the sword still has a small part of the Sages will left in it, so whenever someone who is not the weilder touches it, he get instantly ignited.The current and only weilder of this sword currently is Mugen who has the same ability as the Sage in the tales.(My CE)
    The sword like previously said has a ability to manipulate temperature to a certain point.The user has the choice of canceling any A-rank or Below water or earth jutsu much faster than by doing a regular jutsu,it also gives a advantage that it looks like the user was hit by the jutsu. It works by infusing either cold or hot temperature into the jutsu itself.(this is done by slashing or stabbing) the jutsu.This can also be used on a regular sword of the opponent if it is close combat.
    *The special ability costs 32 chakra
    *The special ability does count towards the 3 moves per turn rule.
    *The special ability can only be used once every 3 turns.Meaning you use it,than wait 2 full turns for it to cool down,than on the third you can use it again.
    The sword looks like so

    ~On Hold~ I want Cali to check this to see if it conflicts with his 7SM swords
    Was told to re-submit

    (Kyousei-Katana no Netsu Seijin ) Great Sword of the Temperature Sage
    Rank: S
    Type: weapon
    Range:N/a
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: It is said this sword was once wielded by one of the family members of the Rokuddu Sage that possessed a ability to control temperature.Being constantly infused with that sages chakra,the sword actually inherited the ability.It is also said that the sword still has a small part of the Sages will left in it, so whenever someone who is not the weilder touches it, he get instantly ignited.The current and only weilder of this sword currently is Mugen who has the same ability as the Sage in the tales.(My CE)
    The sword like previously said has a ability to manipulate temperature to a certain point.The user has the choice of canceling any A-rank or Below water or earth jutsu much faster than by doing a regular jutsu,it also gives a advantage that it looks like the user was hit by the jutsu. It works by infusing either cold or hot temperature into the jutsu itself.(this is done by slashing or stabbing) the jutsu.This can also be used on a regular sword of the opponent if it is close combat.
    *The special ability costs 32 chakra
    *The special ability does count towards the 3 moves per turn rule.
    *The special ability can only be used once every 3 turns.Meaning you use it,than wait 2 full turns for it to cool down,than on the third you can use it again.
    The sword looks like so


    ~Pending~ I'll re-ask Cali to check it O__O

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    A bit late:

    Submissions starting on the 10/10/2011 ending on the 10/16/201

    (The thread will also be updated: Here)
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Raiton: Kabā)- Lightning release: Cover
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: With one handseal, the user covers already existing object or jutsu with layer of lightning. Cannot be used on element such as wind or fire, as those are not solid enough.

    ~Declined~ Covering a jutsu in lightning? Explanations are required for this one. Also, restrictions?

    (Me ni mienai) - Unseen
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (+5 per turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: A technique based on "Camouflage Concealment Technique", the user can use this to make medium-sized objects invisible, instead of making themselves invisible. The technique lasts until canceled if contact is maintained with the object, if not it will stay invisible for approximately 10seconds. Dojutsu can see through this.

    ~Declined~ Restrictions?

    (Hyouton: Furīzu!)- Ice Release: Freeze!
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Tange: Short
    Chakra: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user touches the enemy and injects them with high amount of ice chakra, which causes the victim to freeze, since a human body is made mostly of water. It takes a skilled medical shinobi to de-freeze the victim safely.

    - Twice per battle

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist. Akira's the ower if I remember correctly.

    Shizukesa- Serenity
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Tange: Self
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: -
    Description: The user enters state of serenity. In this state, the user feels no emotions, either good or bad.

    - Twice per battle
    - Lasts four turns

    ~Pending~ I want to know how it'll affect you in battle. Will it stop you from feeling pain? Will you be unable to feel fear when in a genjutsu that is meant to shock you? Elaborate.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by -Itachi- View Post
    (Katonrirīsu:-Hi koi no sakana) Katon Release: Fire Coy Fish

    Type: Attack
    Rank:S
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The User will do one Handsign and release their Katon chakra into the air.. Once released ther user will use shape manipulation to shape the chakra to look like a coy fish. The coy fish itself is about 10 times the users size and covers a very large area

    *Note: Can only be taught by -Itachi-
    *Note: Can't use any S- Ranked fire tech's for one turn after using this
    *Note: Can only Be used twice a battle

    ~Approved~ made it 10 times bigger than you.

    ~Declined~ Please elaborate on what this fish does. Do you simply spit out the fire shaped like a coy fish at your opponent?

    (Suiton rirīsu:-Sui koi no sakana)Suiton Release: Water Coy Fish
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will do one handsign and release his Suiton Chakra while releasing it the user will use Shape Manipulation to shape the water into a Coy Fish then the user will send the Coy Fish at thier oppent.. The Coy Fish is about 10 times the users size

    *Note: Can only be used by -Itachi-
    *Note: The user can not use any S- Ranked Water Tech for one turn after using this
    *Note: Can only be used Twice a Battle

    ~Declined~ Same as above.
    Resubmitting


    (Katonrirīsu:-Hi koi no sakana) Katon Release: Fire Coy Fish

    Type: Attack
    Rank:S
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The User will do one Handsign and and spit a Giant Coy Fish Fire Ball at there oppoent .. The coy fish itself is about 10 times the users size and covers a very large area

    *Note: Can only be taught by -Itachi-
    *Note: Can't use any S- Ranked fire tech's for one turn after using this
    *Note: Can only Be used twice a battle

    ~Approved~ made it 10 times bigger than you.

    (Suiton rirīsu:-Sui koi no sakana)Suiton Release: Water Coy Fish
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will do one handsign and a spit out a giant shaped coy Fish Wtaer Sphere at there opponent The Coy Fish is about 10x's the users Size

    *Note: Can only be used by -Itachi-
    *Note: The user can not use any S- Ranked Water Tech for one turn after using this
    *Note: Can only be used Twice a Battle

    ~Approved~ made it 10 times bigger than you.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-22-2011 at 02:47 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Drizzy~ View Post
    Genjusu:Tenma sutachu za auta toorimichi [Illusion Technique: Demonic Statue of the Outer Path]
    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chacra Cost:50
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: The user performs six handseals, finishing with a clap of the hands. By doing this, the user releases chakra into the atmosphere. As basic Genjutsu procedures, the chakra is used to disrupt the flow of chakra present in the victim's brain,which can disrupt the senses. As soon as this is done, the user will form another handseal, the seal of the tiger, activating the launch of the jutsu. A demonic statue will rise from the ground, from the Head to the fingers on top of the earth,the statue rises from below the opponent, it is positioned so that the opponent is lifted as it rises in the right hand of the statue, the atmosphere and surroundings change, the sky turns red, the clouds black, and the grass and any other vegetation is dull in color. This demonic statue has nine closed eyes, and a scroll in it's mouth. As the opponent is on the right hand of the statue, drenched in fear, leaving the user in reality a chance to attack.On the left hand of the statue, positioned on the palm, is a small human sized replica of the staue, in full body form, this replica has only two eyes, both, blood red.The replica then jumps onto the right hand of which the opponent is located, and slashes his throat with a specially designed kunai. As this is done, the opponent falls out of the genjutsu, traumatized,this causes the opponent to be paralyzed in fear, since Visualizing his own painful death .
    -Can only be used once
    -requires the space of two moves
    -Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

    ~Declined I don't know why I didn't realized this the first time, where are the restrictions and why is thy a Forbidden-rank technique? You have absolutely no physical drawbacks and no reason to rank it that way. Fix it.
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    Custom Weapon

    Exhibition: Hakurankai 展覧会
    Type:Weapon
    Rank: S rank
    Range:Short - Long
    Chakra Cost:40 [+ 30 when blocking Lightning Techniques]
    Damage Points: 20 for normal use [+ 10 to Lightning Techniques]
    Description: Exhibition is a special sword, made of a rare, valuable metal. The Exhibition has a shiny silver blade, and a black handle, with silver diamonds extending throughout. St the tip of te sword handle, Raiton is marked onto it. This sword is not heavy as it doesn't take up much mass, at the end of Each Lightning jutsu, the sword is coated in unfocused Lightning chakra [as of Nagashi but much weaker]. As the sword can be thrown at the opponent as this Lightnin coat can only be short ranged. This sword can only release up to S rank Lightning techniques not requiring handseals. And can also absorb All A rank and lower Lightning Techniques.
    注意 Requires the mastery of Lightning
    注意 Can only absorb three Lightning techniques
    注意 10 damage points are obtained when absorbing a lightning technique
    注意 Can only be wielded by ~Drizzy~

    ~Declined~ OP. Absorbing A-rank and lower makes it stronger than the 7SM. Take that out.
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    Earth/Fire Release: Pillar Explosion|Doton/Katon :chuuseki ekusupuro-jon
    Rank: A rank
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short- Mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user stomps the ground, releasing his chakra into the earth, adding it to the users recently created pillar, manipulating it to explode. Theis explosion is made up of fire [C rank strength] and the earth of the pillar will be shattered into small bullet like structures [C rank Earth]
    注意 Only usable twice per battle
    注意 The Pillar Explosion must be in the same turn as the original Pillar was created.
    注意 Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

    I'm not familiar with the elemental combinations about the C + C = A part, if I'm wrong can you please edit with the correct?


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ There are enough explosion technique already to consider every other techniques based on it to be a rip-off.
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    (Kaze/koudo/faia soshi konbo|Enkou nagareboshi hitoame) Wind/Earth/Fire Elemental Combo |Flaming Meteor Shower
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack
    Range:Short- Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90
    Description: The user performs four handseals, he then releases his doton chakra into the earth [by foot eg.stompimg], he then inhales a normal proportion of air, as this is done, the user forms the tiger handseal,and focuses his katon chakra, the user then stomps on the ground, as 10 boulders [each the size of a regular human body in height and are of spherical shape] are ejected from the ground, up into the air, the user then clasps his hands together, this engulfs the boulders in flames, as the extreme heat of the fire changes the boulders color to glowing red, the user then focuses and generates wind chakra into the air to forcibly push the boulders to strike the opponent, the wind also slightly increases the power of the fire.This scenery is a shower of meteors.
    Note:
    The boulders are formed in front of the user [in short range],added by fire and then launched by the wind [to mid or long range], When the boulders make contact to the ground, the entire terrain of a range will be entirely devastated into the form of a crater, while patches of flames are scattered throughout that entire area.
    注意 Requires the space of two moves [since the usage of multiple elements]
    注意 Usable only once per battle
    注意 Usable for Sannin Rank or Higher
    注意 Requires the space of two moves [since the usage of multiple elements]
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    ~Declined~ First of all, make it count as 3 moves because that's basically 3 different techniques. Secondly, where are the restrictions and drawbacks from using a Forbidden-rank technique?

    (Kaze/koudo/faia soshi konbo|Enkou nagareboshi hitoame) Wind/Earth/Fire Elemental Combo |Flaming Meteor Shower
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Attack
    Range:Short- Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90
    Description: The user performs four handseals, he then releases his doton chakra into the earth [by foot eg.stompimg], he then inhales a normal proportion of air, as this is done, the user forms the tiger handseal,and focuses his katon chakra, the user then stomps on the ground, as 10 boulders [each the size of a regular human body in height and are of spherical shape] are ejected from the ground, up into the air, the user then clasps his hands together, this engulfs the boulders in flames, as the extreme heat of the fire changes the boulders color to glowing red, the user then focuses and generates wind chakra into the air to forcibly push the boulders to strike the opponent, the wind also slightly increases the power of the fire.This scenery is a shower of meteors.
    Note:
    The boulders are formed in front of the user [in short range],added by fire and then launched by the wind [to mid or long range], When the boulders make contact to the ground, the entire terrain of a range will be entirely devastated into the form of a crater, while patches of flames are scattered throughout that entire area.[this jutsu is performed at great speed] As this jutsu is performed, the user coughs up blood. He falls to his knees, as blood runs down his nose, this is due to the incredible force upon the user to perform the technique, after the use of this technique, the users hand becomes dark in color, as they are useless to perform handseals for the next two turns. The users chest also becomes red, since the extreme use of multiple chakra, this overuse of chakra temporarily clogs the chakra circulatory system, causing it not to flow efficiently which will lead to the the use of only three of the basic five elements for the next three turns.
    注意 No S ranks or higher for the next turn
    注意 Usable only once per battle
    注意 Usable for Sannin Rank or Higher
    注意 Requires the space of three moves [since the usage of multiple elements]

    ~Approved~

    Custom Weapon

    Exhibition: Hakurankai 展覧会
    Type:Weapon
    Rank: S rank
    Range:Short - Long
    Chakra Cost:40 [+ 30 when blocking Lightning Techniques]
    Damage Points: 20 for normal use [+ 10 to Lightning Techniques]
    Description: Exhibition is a special sword, made of a rare, valuable metal. The Exhibition has a shiny silver blade, and a black handle, with silver diamonds extending throughout. So the tip of te sword handle, Raiton is marked onto it. This sword is not heavy as it doesn't take up much mass, at the end of Each Lightning jutsu, the sword is coated in unfocused Lightning chakra [as of Nagashi but much weaker: C rank to be exact]. As the sword can be thrown at the opponent as this Lightning coat can only be short ranged. This sword can only release up to S rank Lightning techniques not requiring handseals. And can also absorb B-rank and lower Lightning Techniques 3 times per match.
    注意 Requires the mastery of Lightning
    注意 Can only absorb three Lightning techniques
    注意 10 damage points are obtained when absorbing a lightning technique
    注意 Can only be wielded by ~Drizzy~

    ~Approved~ Made it so you can absorb B-rank lightning 3 times per match

    Genjusu:Tenma sutachu za auta toorimichi [Illusion Technique: Demonic Statue of the Outer Path]
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank:S Rank
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: The user performs six handseals, finishing with a clap of the hands. By doing this, the user releases chakra into the atmosphere. As basic Genjutsu procedures, the chakra is used to disrupt the flow of chakra present in the victim's brain,which can disrupt the senses. As soon as this is done, the user will form another handseal, the seal of the tiger, activating the launch of the jutsu. A demonic statue will rise from the ground, from the Head to the fingers on top of the earth,the statue rises from below the opponent, it is positioned so that the opponent is lifted as it rises in the right hand of the statue, the atmosphere and surroundings change, the sky turns red, the clouds black, and the grass and any other vegetation is dull in color. This demonic statue has nine closed eyes, and a scroll in it's mouth. As the opponent is on the right hand of the statue, drenched in fear, leaving the user in reality a chance to attack.On the left hand of the statue, positioned on the palm, is a small human sized replica of the staue, in full body form, this replica has only two eyes, both, blood red.The replica then jumps onto the right hand of which the opponent is located, and slashes his throat with a specially designed kunai. As this is done, the opponent falls out of the genjutsu, traumatized,this causes the opponent to be paralyzed in fear, since Visualizing his own painful death .
    -Can only be used once
    -requires the space of two moves
    -Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

    ~Approved~

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    Doton/Raiton: sono Kokuou's erekutorikku kouza| Earth/Lightning Release: The King's Electric Chair
    Type:Attack
    Range: Short-Mid
    Rank: S Rank
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user performs two handseals, he then releases his chakra into the earth, manipulating it to center under the opponent, with a click of the user's teeth, a majestic royalty- like chair rises from the ground below the opponent, marked onto the handles of the chair is a picture of a crown, three segments of rock ten emerge from the back of the chair, one restricts both arms, the other restricts the opponent's stomach, and the other restricts his feet. As soon as this is completed [which takes a short time] A violent pulse of Lightning is released from the chair, this pulse of Lightning is similar to that of Chidori Nagashi.
    -Can only be used once per battle
    -Usable by Sannin rank and higher
    -Can only be taught by Drizzy

    ~Declined~ You do realize that since your opponent is standing, the chair would only make him rise a few feet, but he'd still be standing, not sitting. Find a way to make it work, the jutsu in itself is kinda cool.

    Suiton: toraberingu mizu kyuutai|Travelling Orbs of Water
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short-Mid
    Rank:C Rank
    Chackra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Descritption: The user focus his/her suiton chakra, channeling it to their feet, the chakra is then manipulated to form two orbs of water, each below each feet, this orb of water can be manipulated travel along the ground at similar speeds of Tobi running. At the end of use, the water collapses from the spherical shape to form a very small puddle or seep in the earth.

    ~Pending~ I really don't get the point of this technique, is Tobi supposed to be a fast runner? If so, how would the water make you faster?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Toku View Post
    (Suiton- Mizu Parusu ) Water release- Water Pulse
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 120(-15 to the user)
    Description: the user performs hand seals while focusing his water chakra into his gut to spit out a sphere of water. The sphere then grows in size from the moment its released till it’s stopped. As the sphere travels it tears up the ground in the direction of its target. The farther the sphere travels the bigger it grows in size. It’s size has no effect on its rank.
    *Note: No S-rank and above Water the next turn.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: The strain from this jutsu does -15 damage to the user.
    *Note: Can only be used by Toku

    ~Declined~ Either make it S-rank or change your restrictions and description so it can be classified as Forbidden. You need physical drawbacks, -15 won't do anything in a real fight.

    (Suiton- Mizu Gattorin Juu) Water release- Water Gatlin Gun
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 120(-15 to the user)
    Description: the user will gather his water chakra into his dominant hand and mold it into a gatlin gun of water that will begin firing countless water bullets. This technique is a more advanced form of the "water gun technique" but puts a great strain on the user‘s arm as well as leaves it damaged.
    *Note: Cant use water for the next turn or A-rank and above 2 turns after that.
    *Note: The strain from this jutsu does -15 damage to the user.
    *Note: Can only be used Toku.

    ~Declined~ What's with all those Forbidden techniques? Look what I said above.
    (Suiton- Mizu Parusu ) Water release- Water Pulse
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 120(-30 to the user)
    Description: the user performs hand seals while focusing his water chakra into his gut to spit out a sphere of water. The sphere then grows in size from the moment its released till it’s stopped. As the sphere travels it tears up the ground in the direction of its target. The farther the sphere travels the bigger it grows in size. It’s size has no effect on its rank.
    *Note: No Water the next turn or A-rank and above water the turn after that.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: The strain from this jutsu does -30 damage to the user.
    *Note: Can only be used by Toku

    ~Declined~ I think you don't understand the meaning of "physical drawbacks". -30 damage means nothing in our RP, had a restriction that makes you physically vulnerable. That's why Forbidden techniques are Forbidden, they directly affect your health and fighting abilities.

    (Suiton- Mizu Gattorin Juu) Water release- Water Gatlin Gun
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80(-15 to the user)
    Description: the user will gather his water chakra into his dominant hand and mold it into a gatlin gun of water that will begin firing countless water bullets. This technique is a more advanced form of the "water gun technique" but puts a great strain on the user‘s arm as well as leaves it damaged.
    *Note: Cant use water for the next turn.
    *Note: Each bullet can be considered nothing more then a C-rank water attack, it's only because there's dozens of them that this jutsu is classified as S-rank.
    *Note: The strain from this jutsu does -15 damage to the user.
    *Note: Can only be used Toku.

    ~Approved~ Added a restriction in bold, if you're not happy with it VM me and I'll decline it so you can resubmit it with your personal alterations.

    (Fuuinjutsu- Chikyū kenjin no noroi) Sealing technique- Curse of the Earth Sage
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: n/a
    Description: the user will slam his hands on the ground summoning 5 pillars around the opponent (at short range distance away) that will begin to glow drawing the opponents earth chakra. The opponents ability to use earth will be sealed within the pillars for a total of 5 turns unless he is able to destroy 3 of the 5 pillars. The pillars are normal s-rank pillars of earth and can be destroyed accordingly.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: Can't use any Fuuin while this is active.
    *Note: Can only be used by Toku.

    ~Approved~ Made it so you need to destroy 3 of the 5 pillars to stop the jutsu.

    (Fuuinjutsu- Chikyū Sēji no Raitoninguītāsukurōru) Sealing technique- Lightning Eater Scroll of the Earth Sage
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Short- Mid
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: n/a
    Description: the user will perform a row of hand seals and summon a large scroll out of the ground in front of him (between the user and the opponent) that will open itself and begin to drain the opponents lightning chakra. The opponent must destroy the scroll before he can use any lightning chakra to perform any lightning jutsu. The scroll stays active for 5 turns unless destroyed by the opponent. The scroll is just a normal scroll that can be carried on ones back and can be destroyed like any normal scroll.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: Can’t use any Fuuin while this is in play.
    *Note: Can only be used by Toku.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ I've accepted the one above, but let's not make a full series of those with every known element.

    (Fuuinjutsu- Senshi no Uchigawa no Seishin no Baindo Kaijo) Sealing technique- Unbinding of the Inner Spirit of the Warrior
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: Forbbiden
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: n/a
    Description: the user will release straps around his arm that unleash a sealing tattoo that when activated it releases suppressed chakra belonging to the user that had been stored for emergency purposes. The chakra will enhance the user’s senses and reaction time allowing him to follow speeds up to almost the second gate. The user will be able to move at fast speeds almost reaching the second gate from the chakra being released explosively throughout the body pushing the user‘s muscles too their limits. After this jutsu deactivates it will leave the user w/ severe exhaustion and unable of performing any more sealing techniques for the rest of the battle.
    *Note: Can’t use any Fuuinjutsu for the rest of the battle.
    *Note: All jutsus performed once deactivated loose -20 DP.
    *Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    *Note: This jutsu only lasts 4 turns.
    *Note: Cant only be used by Toku.
    *Note: Must be Grim rank to use.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Very similar technique already exist (it's basically a mix between a weaker Killzone and my jutsu: Chakra Release).
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    hyouton: koori yoroi ( ice release ice armor)
    Type:supplemary
    Rank:A
    RangeShort
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: the user will make the hand seals tiger dog boar and focas his wind and water chakra to every cell in his body he will then make the tiger hand seal once more and relase the chakra the chakra will take a form around the users entire body in the form of armor ( like the armoir of the land of iron only made of ice) the armor is able to withestand fire up to A rank with out melting ( s rank or higer fire can melt this) the user is still able to preform hand seals but it is slower by 10 seconds. the user will not feel any big side effects from the ice jutsu due to his control over the ice.
    note: only lasts five turns
    note: no s rank ice /wind/water jutsu the turn after the ice armor wears off.
    note: user is un able to perform fire style nin jutsu while armor is on
    Note: can only use water wind and ice jutsu while armor is on

    ~Declined~ I don't have any problem with the fact that you're blocking A-rank fire, but there's a limit to how many you can block. Also, you aren't stranded in a block of ice, there are openings for the fire to burn you.

    yoton: heika gomu ( lava relase: rubber arms)
    Type:supp/ defense
    Rank: S
    Range:Short-long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: the user will focas his earth and fire chakra into his arms he will then make the tiger dragon and dog hand seals he will then relase the chakra from his arms while doing so he will turn it into rubber the rubber will take the form of an arm the rubber arm is able to extend into long range the user is also able to form other thing with this jutsu instead of forming an arm the user could choose to make a rubber weapon like a hammer or a wall as long as the jutsu is active the arms can be molded into anything since its rubber and its under the control of the user ( to a certin extend i won't be able to mold the rubber into a gaint dog no but i could make weapons or a wall by turning the arm to the side and extnding its sides) the rubber arms are strong not as weak as normal rubber as it has lava qualties the user can also make the arms lava if he wishs but he will exp sercy burns on his arms making his arms useless.
    note: can only be used 3 times per battle ( unless user makes the arms normal lava in which case only once per battle)
    note: lasts 4 turns
    note: can not preform hand seals while jutsu is active
    note: can't use any other jutsu while jutsu is active
    note: after jutsu wears off the user can not preform earth/ fire jutsu abve a rank for 2 turns
    note: can only be used by lava users
    note: if lava arms are made instead of rubber after jutsu wears off users arms become burnt and unuseable.
    note: rubber arms are able to garb things with its hands
    note: the arms have the power of a normal arm

    ~Declined~ Only Dodai can perform rubber forms of Lava. Unless I am mistaken, you do not have such bio.


    Chakra zoushoku ( chakra increase)
    Type: supp
    Rank: forbidden
    Range:Short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 90 ( plus ten to taijutsu plus ten to ninjutsu plus ten to speed)
    Description: the user will take out a small pill ( with no effects) and put it between his two hands in the tiger hand seal he will focas all of his chakra into the pill and sallow it he will then make 5 hand seals and the pill will expell a larger amoint of chakra then that which was given the chakra will suddenly begin to surround the user the increase in chakra will make the user faster and stronger ( almost like the raikages lighting armor except not as fast) it will also decrease the amount of time it takes to switch elements and to use ninjutsu as the chakra is already flowing out of him. After 4 turns the chakra will implode on the user killing him the chakra will then explode in a shock wave of chakra hitting anything within mid range
    Note: can only be used once ( after it wears off user will die)
    Note: only lasts four turns
    Note: takes 5 seconds to fill the pill with the chakra leaveing the user open to attacks
    Note: after use user will die
    Note: user can chooseto blow up the chakra by the second turn on his own free will
    Note: can't turn off jutsu once activeated
    Note: user can not control the explosion at the 4 turn mark ( so basicly useing this is a last chance thing as it will kill the user in the end)

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ This jutsu doesn't make any sense. What's the point focusing chakra in a pill if you're going to immediately re-integrate it in your system? It would've been the same to just focus your chakra. In any case, if you did simple focus chakra then it would've been too similar to the gates.
    re submitting

    hyouton: koori yoroi ( ice release ice armor)
    Type:supplemary
    Rank:A
    RangeShort
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: the user will make the hand seals tiger dog boar and focas his wind and water chakra to every cell in his body he will then make the tiger hand seal once more and relase the chakra the chakra will take a form around the users entire body in the form of armor ( like the armoir of the land of iron only made of ice) the armor is able to withestand fire up to A rank with out melting ( s rank or higer fire can melt this) the user is still able to preform hand seals but it is slower by 10 seconds. the user will not feel any big side effects from the ice jutsu due to his control over the ice.
    note: only lasts five turns
    note: no s rank ice /wind/water jutsu the turn after the ice armor wears off.
    note: user is un able to perform fire style nin jutsu while armor is on
    Note: can only use water wind and ice jutsu while armor is on
    note: can only block fire jutsus 3 times after blocking it 3 times the ice will melt off
    note: there are small openings in the armor ( the joints in which they arms leg etc turn) they can be broken threw with b rank of earth/ lighting or burnt with by fire ( if aimed right)

    ~Declined~ You didn't get what I meant when I said there were openings in the armor. It means that you aren't fully protected from the fire. A big enough fire could severely burn you even if you have your armor. Take out the restriction on the openings and make a new one. Lastly, this is only an A-rank technique, make it so it can block 2 A-rank fire before melting away, not 3.

    new

    genjutsu buriza-do ( genjutsu blizzard)
    Type:supplemary
    Rank:A
    Range: mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: the user will make 3 hand seals and send chakra signels into the enemys brain the enemy will belive that he sees snow falling after 2 turns the snow will become a rageing blizzard making the enemy think he sees a blizzard we will think that he is walking threw the blizzard blind making him unawhere of his surrondings ( as he has no idea where he is and would be wondering around blind as a bat)
    note: can only be used once
    note: can onyl be used by Haku Yuki-
    note: takes two turns for the jutsu to take effect

    ~Declined~ Fix the name (follow the official template) and fix the description. You're repeating yourself 3 times in it (look the bold parts). I know English isn't your first language (at least I hope so), but anyone can come up with a grammatically correct description, put some effort into it.

    Hyouton hogohi Koori disuku ( ice release protective ice disk)
    Rank: forbidden
    Range: long
    Type: defensive
    Chakra cost: 50
    damage points: n/a
    description: the user will make an ice disk ( which is a canon jutsu) and focus all his wind and water chakra into it making the ice more thick and strong the user will then place the place disk above him and then will make 5 hand seals and says kai ( thus releasing the chakra added into the ice making the ice expand) the ice disk will then grow in size so big it could be a protective shield cable of protecting against such a jutsu as deidara’s c4 clay doll ( the ice over the enemy and the user would grow as big as an entire village )
    note: can only be expanded to long range if over the user.
    note: can only be used twice
    note: after use the user cannot perform any ice, wind or water jutsu for 2 turns.
    note: must use ice style ice disk beforehand ( so this jutsu would take two jutsus up)
    note: after use user will collapse and will be unable to stand for 15 seconds due to the large amount of chakra expelled ( but can still move in general like I could still move my hands)
    note: can only defend against one jutsu per usen( but if a second jutsu hits the ice it will break but will weaken the jutsu heading at the user )
    note: can only be used for defensive purposes ( I can’t use this to extend a ice disk I send at the enemy )

    ~Declined~ OP. Also, same as above, fix the description.

    Hyouton Koori kasui no hayashi ( ice style ice spiked forest )
    Rank: S
    Range: long
    Chakra cost: 40
    damage points:80
    description: the user will make 5 hand seals and focas his water and wind chakra into the ice around the filed the user will make a sixth hand seal and focus his chakra up trees made of ice will rise and branchs made of spiked ice will come out from each one the user can make a single ice tree or a large amount of them the ground shakes as the ice comes up giving the opponent fair warning to dodge the only wall to dodge would be to go into the sky. Or use some type of fire to melt the ice before it comes up the only wall to dodge would be to go into the sky. Or use some type of fire to melt the ice before it comes up .note: can only be used once ( as it changes the battle filed into a forest of ice trees) the user can control where ever the trees rise up at.
    note: must have ice around ( like in order to use this jutsu to its fullest power you’d have to be standing on a frozen lake but a small ice source would work too but the tree would be small )
    note: can not use ice, water or wind Justus for the next 2 turns.
    Note: user will be very tired after use dulling his reaction time by 15 seconds

    ~Declined~ I can't even understand what's written. I'm sorry but I can't check those techniques. I've read your precedent submissions and they weren't as bad as this one. If you're not willing to put the effort of coming up with a clear and ENGLISH description, then I won't bother checking them.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Customs for this week:

    1. Summoning Animal: Badgers
    Scroll Owner: Kid Ace2392
    Other Users who have signed contract: None
    Summoning Boss if existing: N/A at the moment
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A at the moment

    While update shortly with summonings and additional info..

    ~Declined~ Pretty sure the Badger contract already exist even though it wasn't added in the official summons list.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Seto Kaiba View Post
    P.s Roku is fine it.
    Custom weapon

    (akuma ha-pu)Demon harp
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short/long
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points: N/A(20+ to any genjutsu,that already has a damage point)
    Description: The harp is made from pure stainless steel but light in weight and is capeable of conducting chakra.its strings are four in number and each strings produces different sharp tone when striked. Each tone brands it's listeners with a particular type of illusion,with the 4th string as an exception.Also the harp acts as a barrier against illusion attacks thrown at the weilder. Because of it's portablity and stylishness,the weilder is able to strap it unto his or her back,whilst in battle.
    -Note: The user can't perform handseals whilst holding the harp.
    -when in posession of the user,every genjutsu used by the user,gain's +20 damage points and the harp blocks illusiön based attacks,except advanced ones(forbidden or ms illusions).
    -illusion shielding counts as one of 3 moves a turn and can only shield 3 times per match.
    -Note: The harp can only be used by Seto Kaiba.

    I would make the tones as seperate jutsus,if approved^^
    explain how your ability to coutner genjutsu is going to work on this aswell as explain the exception of the 4th string
    Custom weapon

    (akuma ha-pu)Demon harp
    Rank: S
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Short/long
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points: N/A(20+ to any genjutsu,that already has a damage point)
    Description: The harp is made from pure stainless steel but light in weight and is capeable of conducting chakra.its strings are four in number and each strings produces different sharp tone when striked. Each tone brands it's listeners with a particular type of illusion,Also the harp acts as a barrier against illusion attacks thrown at the weilder. Because of it's portablity and stylishness,the weilder is able to strap it unto his or her back,whilst in battle.
    -Note: The user can't perform handseals whilst holding the harp.
    -when in posession of the user,every genjutsu used by the user,gain's +20 damage points and the harp blocks illusiön based attacks,except advanced ones(forbidden or ms illusions) and also illusion shielding counts as one of 3 moves a turn and can only shield 3 times per match.


    -Note: The harp can only be used by Seto Kaiba.

    (Removed the 4th string being special part)

    ~Declined~ Your restriction makes no sense whatsoever (+20 damage on genjutsus? Genjutsus don't do damage). Fix it and resubmit.

    Quote Originally Posted by Seto Kaiba View Post
    0(genjutsu-omoi karada) - illusion technique- heavy body
    Rank: S
    Type:Defence/Offense
    Range: long
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:This unique illusion technique,makes the foe think that his whole body has instantly grown so heavy,that he can't barely move a muscle.Even,turning his head sideways,would be sort of a task.
    -last's for one turn.
    -twice per battle.
    -no S-rank and above genjutsu next turn.

    ~Declined~ OP, how does it come into effect. Long range, really? Weaken the ability. I don't want this technique to be an instant kill.

    (kansetsu shogai)- joints disorder
    Rank:A
    Type: Defence/offense
    Range: close
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user performs a series of gentle fist strikes on the target,but not on the chakra points nor the gates but the joints(major joints).thus temproraly disordering them and leaving the target defenseless.
    -target stays immobilized for a turn after being hit.
    -twice per battle.
    -must be a hyuuga clan member.

    ~Declined~ So by hitting one spot on your opponent's body you make it impossible for them to move for 1 turn? Either make it clear how many blows you need to give to paralyze them or change the effect.
    (genjutsu-omoi karada) - illusion technique- heavy body
    Rank: S
    Type:Defence/Offense
    Range: mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:The user does a unique set of handseals that leaves the foe under an illusion,making him think that his whole body has instantly grown so heavy,that he can't barely move a muscle but this is only temporarily.
    -last's for one turn.
    -once per battle.
    -no S-rank and above genjutsu next turn.

    ~Declined~ When resubmitting jutsus, I need you to bold the added part or explain what you took away. Otherwise I won't check them.

    (kansetsu shogai)- joints disorder
    Rank:A
    Type: Defence/offense
    Range: close
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage points: 60
    Description: The user performs a series of gentle fist strikes on the target body,but not on the chakra points nor the gates but the joints(major joints).thus temproraly disordering them and leaving the target defenseless.
    -target stays immobilized for a turn after being hit with this technique.
    -twice per battle.
    -must be a hyuuga clan member.

    ~Approved~

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    (genjutsu-medusa miyaru) - illusion technique- medusa gaze
    Rank: S
    Type:Defence/Offense
    Range: short-mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description:This unique illusion technique,requires the user to infuse his eye balls with chakra,causing it to glow pearl.a glance at it by the foe would leave them in an illusion that makes them think their whole body has turned into stone thus temporarily immobilizing them.
    -there must be a mutual eye contact to activate the illusion.
    -last's for one turn.
    -once per battle.
    -no S-rank and above genjutsu next turn.

    ~Declined~ Unless you're a doujutsu user, nothing related to your eyes will be approved, especially when it comes to genjutsu.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by SHARINGAN_USER UCHIHA_ITACHI View Post
    (Kuchyose- kyojin makai hagetaka) Summoning- Giant Hell's VULTURE

    Description:
    After making few handseals the user summons a great,giant and badass VULTURE of all time named GAVA, which shows no mercy on his opponent, he looks like a big Raven with white eyes, which is extremely powerful and battle type, can use up to S Rank jutsu's of Fire and Wind. He creates Powerful fire attack by releasing fire from his beak and wind attack by swing his wings, it has sharp edge beak which is able to pass through the solid rock defense also has very strong claws, strong enough to carry away other summonings [depend on the weight/size of other summoning] user can ride on his back to use combos and also has very loud noise which can disturb/distract the opponent, it is able to fly high in the sky where opponent's jutsu's are unreachable.

    -Scroll Owner: -SUUI-
    -Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    -Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    -Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
    -Must have signed Hells VELTURE contract
    -Can only be summoned once per battle

    -Can only use Fire & Wind elements
    -User must known Wind & Fire up to S-Rank
    -Its move will count as 1 of the 3 moves





    ~If i messed up something...feel free to EDIT..!!!~



    Okay i've changed it into VULTURE contract..!!!

    Picture:


    ~Declined~ I have nothing against the summon, but don't associate element to it just yet. Summons can be diversified with several elements, however keep in mind that one summon may only have 1 element.

    ](Kuchyose- kyojin makai hagetaka) Summoning- Giant Hell's VULTURE

    Description:
    After making few handseals the user summons a great,giant and badass VULTURE of all time named GAVA, which shows no mercy on his opponent, he looks like a big Raven with white eyes, which is extremely powerful and battle type, can use powerful attacks with his beak and his wings, it has sharp edge beak which is able to pass through the solid rock defense also has very strong claws, strong enough to carry away other summonings [depend on the weight/size of other summoning] user can ride on his back to use combos and also has very loud noise which can disturb/distract the opponent, it is able to fly high in the sky where opponent's jutsu's are unreachable.

    -Scroll Owner: -SUUI-
    -Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    -Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
    -Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
    -Must have signed Hells VULTURE contract
    -Can only be summoned once per battle


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    Okay....I've removed the Elemental attack part...!!!

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Black-Leg View Post
    Alright. Just trying to make it non lethal move like most techniques are.

    This week:

    1. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Diable Jambe ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Devil's Leg
    Rank: Forbidden
    Type: Mode
    Range: Self
    Chakra cost: 50 ( - 15 per turn )
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: Black-Leg taijutsu master can activate a mode which will double their speed. The mode requires user to be at least Sannin rank and to be trained in other Black-Leg taijutsu techniques. To activate this technique an user below Kage rank must stop and spin while guiding fire chakra into their leg, granting temporary speed boost. User that has already reached Kage orf higher rank can activate this technique while battling without stopping moving. Once activated, the technique'll increase user leg's strength momenarily and Leg taijutsu damage done by user will be multipled with 1.5 with the leg this is activated on. Using this technique for longer duratons will cause painful cramp and muscle strain if used for four conscutive turns. This also decreases user's speed by 25% of the original speed upon the first usage. Second usage will drop the speed from 75% that was left to 35% of the original speed before using this technique for the first time and the feeling of pain in the leg becomes overwhelming, making it almost impossible to walk. This technique can be used on one leg and can be maintained for max four turns. User's leg looks as if it were on fire when this mode is activated and is covered in chakra. Getting hit by this causes also nerve damage to opponent, giving slight sensation of burning to the nevers and opponent once hit due fire chakra in leg.
    • Causes strain to user's muscles and leaves user limping if used for long durations.
    • Can be activated twice per battle and the second usage will be extremely painful and second usage will last only two turns.
    • Costs 15 chakra per turn.


    2. ( Raiton: Tesura Raikō ) - Lightning release: Tesla Lightning
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80 ( - 10 to user's hand )
    Description: Tesla Lightning is a lightning element based technique which unlike most Lightning release techniques, doesn't hold much brute force in it. To use Tesla Lightning user must focus chakra into their arm and gather a small ball at the center of their palm. Once the ball is created user can release it in form of a straight lightning bolt towards their target(s). This is where the Tesla Lightning differs from many other lightning techniques as the Tesla Lightning can fork and cover up a large area without being shot multiple times (original bolt can fork max 15 times and it will last three meters without forking before disappearing). The forking happens as user wishes it to happen and once it hits target, it will travel as an electrical current through their body and fork again into more bolts which then attack other enemies. Having a strong electrical current like that travel through body will burn the target's/s' body, shock and damage without killing. Even though the lightning can fork, the strength of it will decrease while travelling through a target's body. As said earlier, Tesla lightning won't have much destructive properties but can nullify the effects of earth techniques once it hits them.
    • Causes damage to user varying on the strength of the technique
    • No other lightning techniques can be used at the same turn by the user
    • Can be used only one per battle.


    ~Both Approved~
    THIS WEEK.

    Updating old custom(s):

    ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Sugoi Keru Saiten ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Great Kick Festival
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 15 ( + 20 if used with higher speed )
    Damage points 60 ( + 10 if used with higher speed. - 10/15 to user )
    Description: User encases feet with chakra after he/she has achieved atleast 2nd gate's speed and jumps in air, at opponent. While being in front of opponent user will start kicking with great speed and deliver multiple kicks at the chest area of opponent. From the view of opponent it seems as if user would have multiple legs due the speed of kicks that land. After using this jutsu user suffers little damage and strain on legs.
    Note:
    - Can be used only once per battle
    - Requires speed of 2nd gate
    - User cannot run or use taijutsu at the same turn.
    1. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Extra Haché ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Highest-rate Mincemeat
    Rank: A
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60 (- 10 to user)
    Description: An user that knows Black-Leg taijutsu and has speed level of at least eight (speed chart) can, once taught, use Highest-rate Mincemeat. The technique includes fast footwork and will work only if the target's short or close range from the user. To begin with this technique, user must jump in air and once he/she gets close enough to the opponent, user starts delivering fast paced kicks aimed at mainly opponent's torso area. The technique isn't automatically 60 damage but can be less if the opponent is a taijutsu specialist and/or has sharingan to increase their reaction time that he/she uses to block the hits. Even the hits are blocked, the kicks will hurt. If not blocked, user can aim at opponent's vitals and cause quite alot damage by hitting opponent's internal organs and bones. If this is combined with Diable Jambe, the technique gains burning attributes. As long as user's airborne he/she can attack their target with more taijutsu but once user lands, he/she is forced to jump backwards and allow their feet to rest for a short period of time (the higher user's rank is, the shorter time is required for feet to rest).
    • Can be used only if user is properly trained and has speed level of eight and above.
    • Can be used twice per battle with three turn interval between each usage.



    ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Jetto Utsu ) - Black-leg Taijutsu: Jet Shoot
    Type: Offensive - Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short - Close ( Mid )
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: 35
    Description: User concentrates chakra into own legs through chakra circulation system. Once that's done user will pump his/her muscles and make a kick with user's right leg as user is standing on his/her left leg. The kick that's delivered is strong enough to send opponent or ally flying if it hits. When it hits it doesn't really cause much damage to opponent but it will send the opponent flying to longer distances than a normal kick would. This can be used to send ally flying at opponent or to avoid attack if other person jumps on the user's leg before he/she kicks. This will send the ally flying to mid range from user.
    Note:
    - Can be used twice
    - It takes few seconds to prepare the kick
    - User cannot move while preparing the kick.
    Example of the kick's strength:
    2. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Armée de L'Air ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Air Force
    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive - Supplementary
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 25
    Damage points: N/A (+ 40)
    Description: Air Force is a Black-Leg taijutsu technique designed for a counter attack or an opening. The technique itself is a chakra infused kick which takes form of 360 crescent kick. The kick itself is strong enough to send opponent flying away from the user. The kick can also be used to send allies flying into other ranges, though once a strong(er) kick is attempted user must spend more time concentrating before kicking. This can also be used quickly in openings to deal a quick hit to the opponent and then expose them for further combinations.
    • Can be used twice per battle
    • If you attempt on sending your ally to other range, the ally must jump on your leg just as you're kicking to guarantee the strength of kick to send him/her away.



    ~Both Declined~ If you're updating them, I need to know what you're changing. Either describe it in outside the jutsu or put the added/changed part in bold.

    New one:

    3. ( Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu: Venaison Shoot ) - Black-Leg Taijutsu: Venison Shoot
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Close
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 60 (- 20 to user)
    Description: Before using this technique, one is required to have knowledge of how using Highest-rate Mincemeat and Diable Jambe. Combining these two attacks, Black-Leg taijutsu user is able of using a technique that is fatal on closer ranges. First, one must have activated Diable Jambe. After that the user jumps above opponent and starts spinning horizontally in a position where user's leg is pointing down at their opponent, he/she starts furiously kicking with one of their feet at opponent's chest and belly area as already activated Diable Jambe increases their strength. The kicks aren't dealing internal damage but are extremely strong and the places where hits are dealt can be seen through opponent's back as the user's ignited, glowing leg lands kicks on the target. After the spinning stops, user finishes with a powerful axe kick on the opponent's head/shoulder area which is strong enough to break stone. This technique is strong enough to deal considerable damage even to medium-sized summoning creatures.
    • This technique disables Diable Jambe after using (without strong cramps/leg strain to user that would come from Diable Jambe).
    • Can be used once per battle, and like after every fast paced attack, user requires few seconds to let their leg muscles relax.



    ~Declined~ Resubmit when "Higest-rate Mincemeat" is approved.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Daiki View Post
    ~Would appreciate if my checker would give me feedback and constructive critism on what to change instead of just a
    Decline~


    Yomigaeri - Kaizoe Danka l Resurrection - Second Stage
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage points: N/A (+ 10 to Ninjutsu)
    The user stands motionless and closes his eyes, he will charge up as much chakra as he can throughout his body.he will compress the chakra inside his body and when at his peak will say 'True Despair'.The user will then quickly release this chakra causing a small shockwave of green chakra to blow out.The user's form will be radically changed.He will gain even longer hair and gains long crying marks, he gains huge black furry wings which gives him flight and a long thin black tail which can used as an offensive weapon.is waist becomes covered in something similar to black fur, which also covers his arms and legs. His fingers grow claw-like extensions and his feet become like talons. The irises of his eyes turn yellow while the sclera becomes green.He gains two horns on his head.While in this form the Users speed is radically increased and also his Ninjutsu skills are boosted.this form is extremely dangerous.When over The user is exhausted and barley able to move making him unable to perform any Taijutsu.He ash to rely on Ninjutsu for two turns leaving him incredibly vunerable to attack
    ~Can be used for 4 turns
    ~users power is generally boosted
    ~Exhausted after use
    ~Cannot use taijutsu for 2 turns after
    ~Speed is considerably lower after
    ~Can be used twice per battle
    ~Can only be used by Daiki
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    ~Declined~ The ones checking the customs are in no way forced to give you feedback or reason for a declined custom. However, I often if not always do leave comments, here's mine on this one:

    I will not accept any jutsu that use font, size change, aligned/centered text or spoilers for anything else then pictures. Re-submit in a more readable way.


    Thank you.

    Apologize about that,mus tof been a bad day o_O

    Yomigaeri - Kaizoe Danka l Resurrection - Second Stage
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: N/A
    Chakra cost: N/A
    Damage points: N/A (+ 10 to Ninjutsu)

    The user stands motionless and closes his eyes, he will charge up as much chakra as he can throughout his body.he will compress the chakra inside his body and when at his peak will say 'True Despair'.The user will then quickly release this chakra causing a small shockwave of green chakra to blow out.The user's form will be radically changed.He will gain even longer hair and gains long crying marks, he gains huge black furry wings which gives him flight and a long thin black tail which can used as an offensive weapon.is waist becomes covered in something similar to black fur, which also covers his arms and legs. His fingers grow claw-like extensions and his feet become like talons. The irises of his eyes turn yellow while the sclera becomes green.He gains two horns on his head.While in this form the Users speed is radically increased and also his Ninjutsu skills are boosted.this form is extremely dangerous.When over The user is exhausted and barley able to move making him unable to perform any Taijutsu.He ash to rely on Ninjutsu for two turns leaving him incredibly vunerable to attack
    ~Can be used for 4 turns
    ~users power is generally boosted
    ~Exhausted after use
    ~Cannot use taijutsu for 2 turns after
    ~Speed is considerably lower after
    ~Can be used twice per battle
    ~Can only be used by Daiki

    Mode Picture:


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Pretty much everything related to Ulquiorra was already created.

    Ranton - Akuma Emnu l Storm Release - Demon Haze
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 35
    Damage points: N/A (15 per turn while in Haze)
    The user performs one handseal and takes a deep breath,He will then exhale a large & thick black fog which will cover most of the battle field.The Fog acts as a haze and will block the foe's vision while he inside.The fog is a large thundercloud infused with the users chakra, this allows him to locate anything inside the fog.While inside the fog its impossible for the Foe to use any S-ranked and below Raiton jutsus as it will be absorbed by the thunderclouds.On the Contrary the User gains a +5 boost to Raiton/Ranton jutsus.The Foe will have nearly no sense of were he is giving the user an advantage.Since the fog is made of Thundercloud every turn the Foe is inside the Fog he takes 20 damage from the thunder and the Foe cannot simply just run/jump out of the Haze as they would get electrocuted back inside..This fog is similar to the Hidden mist jutsu although can only removed by a strong wind of S-rank and above and it has be a AoE(Area of effect) as a a direct, small wind would only remove a segment of the thunder cloud.At any time the user may Dismiss the Thundercloud.Since the user and the Thundercloud share the same chakra type it would be impossible to locate the user using something like the Bykugan.
    ~Lasts for 3 Turns
    ~May only be used Twice
    ~User Cant perform again for another Two turns
    ~No Ranton jutsu for one turn afterwoulds
    ~User deals 5 less damage on next Raiton or suiton jutsu.
    ~Must have a Ranton biography to use
    ~Can only be used by Daiki


    Fog looks similar to this:



    ~Declined~ Ok...

    -What's true for your opponent is also true for you, so if the fog absorbs lightning, it won't boost yours.
    -Take out the part where it damage your opponent while he's inside (or make it a 1 move jutsu, not lasting for 3 turns).
    -Fog is fog, mist is mist, wind is wind. Any good wind gust can clear the fog, no need to be S-rank. Rank is often subjective to elemental manipulations (making spears/knives...etc), so it doesn't reflect the actual effect of the technique.
    -Impossible for a Byakugan to spot you? I don't think so. Take that part away.
    -Make it once per match.


    That's about it.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-22-2011 at 03:50 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Katana jutsu: Ken fuusha)-Katana art: Sword windmill
    Rank: A
    Type: Defence/Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points: 60
    The user takes two katanas in each hand and starts to spin them around in fast circles. The swords will create a windmill in front of himself with the swords. The windmill can defend against weak attacks up to C-Rank that's directed right at them except for earth jutsus cause they will just break the swords. If it it's a wind jutsu the sword will just "absorb" the wind and send it back on the opponent causing a A-Ranked wind gust that travels up to Mid-Range.
    ~Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle
    ~Note 2: Can only be used by ~The Norwegian~

    ~Declined~ Feels somewhat surrealistic to spin your sword at such a pace that you'd be able not only to spot A-rank techniques, but to send some of them back at the opponent. Lower the abilities.

    (Katon: Nenshou kangoku)-Fire Release: Burning Prison
    Rank: B
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: 40
    The user perform 2 handseals and then creates a small fire prison around the opponent. The fire raise from the ground like pillars and take the shape of a prison. When the prison is made the opponent can't move without getting burned.
    ~Can only be used by ~The Norwegian~

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Kairai ginou: Bodi shi-rudo)-Puppet skills: Body shield
    Rank: S
    Type: Defence
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    The user controlls his puppet to create a shield in front of his body, the same as he makes the small arm shield only that this time the whole body turn into a shield. This shield can guard against any jutsus except those of forbidden ranks.
    ~Note: Can only be used two times per battle
    ~Note 2: Can only be used by ~The Norwegian~

    ~Declined~ Do you honestly think this puppet could defend you from such jutsu as Kirin and Amaterasu (which are S-rank)? Fix it.

    (Kairai Ginou: Zou)-Puppet skills: Elephant
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40(If summoned)
    Damage points: 80
    Elephant is the largest puppet made by ~The Norwegian~. It looks just like an elephant and weights just the same, the only difference is that the two horns of the elephant are larger and sharper. Elephant can suck up water in it's nose and spit it out at the opponent like an A-Rank water attack that reaches Mid-Range, and it can stomp the ground causing a B-Rank earthquake that will reaches Mid-Range. Due too it's size the elephant can withstand B-Rank attacks and lower. Elephant is kept in a scroll and can be summoned when the user wants it.
    ~Note: The water attack and the earthquake counts as one of the three moves per round
    ~Note 2: Can only be summoned once per battle
    ~Note 3: Can only be used by ~The Norwegian~

    ~Declined~ You'll notice that I made both the attacks up to mid-range, keep it that way. Also, clarify whether or not the water source the elephant absorb can be taken from an actual water jutsu coming toward him. The rest seems fine.

    (Kairai ginou: Naito)-Puppet skills: The Knight
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack/Defence
    Range: Short/Long
    Chakra cost: 40(If summoned)
    Damage points: 80
    The Knight is a puppet made by ~The Norwegian~. It has the same hight as a normal man but is so much stronger, and wields a large sword. The Knight wears an armor making him so strong that only A-Rank attacks and above can pierce it. The Knight's only weak point is under his legs, where he has no protection. The Knight is kept in a scroll and can be summoned as the user wants too.
    ~Note: Can only be used by ~The Norwegian~

    ~Declined~ OP. Either make it so he can withstands a fixed amount of A-rank or an unlimited amount of B-rank and under.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 10-22-2011 at 04:04 AM.

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