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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    I am re-posting just to make sure everyone sees and understand that the new limit is now set at 3 submissions per week.

    Pass the word people.
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    All done now

    Have fun re-spamming it

    Keep in mind the new 3 submissions per week rule !

     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Submissions starting on the 10/24/2011 ending on the 10/30/2011
     
         

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Blade Hyuga View Post
    (Kuchoiyse: Toro)-Summoning Technique: Toro the great bull
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Toro is the boss of the bulls he is normaly agitated when summoned and would at times slap the user with his tail for summoning him. He is the bull associated with earth and is around 7ft tall his horns are able to shoot off and grow back in very short time like all bulls, he can stomp his hooves and increase an earth jutsu by 20 dp, and up 1 rank

    (Kuchoiyse: Riko)-Summoning Technique: Riko the fire bull
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Riko is the bull associated with fire and has the same attitude as Toro, he also hates being summoned even more than Toro. He is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back. His ability it he can manipulate any fire jutsu and make it bigger adding 15 dp to any fire jutsu

    (Kuchoiyse: Aero)-Summoning Technique: Aero the wind bull
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Aero is the bull associated with Wind and is more level headed than the other bulls he is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back, His unique ability is that he can disapear into the wind and strengthen the users wind jutsu by one rank.

    (Kuchoiyse: Marina)-Summoning Technique: Marina the water bull
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Marina is the bull associated with water and is more level headed than the other bulls and also the only female bull she is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off her horns and grow back, Her unique ability is that she can Sink into any water source and increase its damage points by 10 points.

    (Kuchoiyse: Zeek)-Summoning Technique: Zeek the lightning bull
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Zeek is the bull associated with lightning and is more level headed than the other bulls he is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back, His unique ability is that he can disperse into lightning and go into the clouds to enhance the users lightning so moves that need to send lightning into the air can be automatic since he is lightning in the air.

    -Only two bulls can be summoned per battle
    -Can only be taught by Blade Hyuga
    -Each bull lasts 4 turns
    -After the bull has left the user cant summon it and is limited to only B-Rank of that element for 2 turns

    ~All Declined~ Place your restrictions under each individual submission and personalize those restrictions. I've seen some very OP stuff (+20 damage point for example) and all their abilities need to be restricted.
    Re-Submitting

    (Kuchoiyse: Toro)-Summoning Technique: Toro the great bull
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Toro is the boss of the bulls he is normaly agitated when summoned and would at times slap the user with his tail for summoning him. He is the bull associated with earth and is around 7ft tall his horns are able to shoot off and grow back in very short time like all bulls. His main ability is he can merge with the ground and boost earth attacks by 5 dp
    -Can only be taught by Blade Hyuga
    -Every now and then the user will take 10 direct damage from him being summoned
    -Toro stays on the field for 4 turns
    -He may not be summoned until the battle has carried on 3 moves
    -After he has left the field the user is limited to B-Rank earth for 3 turns


    (Kuchoiyse: Riko)-Summoning Technique: Riko the fire bull
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Riko is the bull associated with fire and has the same attitude as Toro, he also hates being summoned even more than Toro. He is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back. His ability it he can manipulate any fire jutsu and make it bigger adding 5 dp to any fire jutsu
    -Can only be taught by Blade Hyuga
    -Riko stays on the field for 4 turns
    -He may not be summoned until the battle has carried on 2 moves
    -After he has left the field the user is limited to B-Rank Fire for 3 turns

    (Kuchoiyse: Zeek)-Summoning Technique: Zeek the lightning bull
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:N/A
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Zeek is the bull associated with lightning and is more level headed than the other bulls he is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back, His unique ability is that he can disperse into lightning and go into the clouds to enhance the users lightning so moves that need to send lightning into the air can be automatic since he is lightning in the air.
    -Can only be taught by Blade Hyuga
    -Zeek stays on the field for 4 turns
    -After he has left the field the user is limited to B-Rank lightning for 3 turns

    Please edit if needed

    ~All Declined~ When re-submitting customs, you need to put the added part in bold or explain what you took out from the original.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Raiton:Raikou Ridairekushon (lightning Redirection)
    Rank:S
    type: Defence/Offense
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:40
    Damage points:10-80

    Description:This technique allows the user to absorb lightning into their body as energy, then release it in a more desirable direction.The user creates a pathway for a lightning attack used against him with the fingertips and redirects the raiton chakra/energy
    through their arm to the shoulder, then down into the stomach. The stomach is the source of energy in your body; it is called the sea of Chi. From your stomach you direct it up again and one the other arm shooting it out in a blast of lightning.

    ~Restrictions~
    -Can only redirect S rank and below lightning techniques
    -Once used no raiton based techiques can be used for five turns
    -Can't be used while moving
    -Can only be used as of now by Swizzik & hawaiianmike
    -The rank,chakra cost and damage of this attack is the same as the attack its redirecting
    -Can only be used thrice









    ~Declined~ This jutsu as been done countless times already.

    Katon:kanetsu ridairekushon(Heat redirection)
    Rank: S
    Type: Defence/Offense
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:40
    Damage points:10-80

    Description:This technique allows the user to redirect heat from fire based attacks releasing it in a more desirable direction.The user creates a pathway for a fire attack's heat energy used against him with the fingertips and redirects the katon chakra/energy ,by the use of their chakra network,through their arm to the shoulder, then down into the stomach. The stomach is the source of energy in your body; it is called the sea of Chi. From your stomach you direct it up again and one the other arm shooting it out in a concetrated wave of pure heat that is capable of severely burning its victim.

    ~Restrictions~
    -Can only redirect S rank and below fire techniques
    -Once used no katon based techiques can be used for five turns
    -Can't be used while moving
    -Can only be used as of now by Swizzik & hawaiianmike
    -The rank,chakra cost and damage of this attack is the same as the attack its redirecting
    -Can only be used thrice






    ~Declined~ Since the lightning one was already made, you do not own the patent to this jutsu, hence you can't make copies of it for different element.

    Heart Sense (chuushin Kansei)
    Rank:B
    Type:Suplementary
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra:25(+10 for each turn active)
    Damage points:N/A

    Description:The user focuses chakra in their ears in order to enhance their hearing.This enables them to locate and focus in their target and also block other sounds which enables them to find the target wherever they are on the battle field. The enhancement is so potent that it allows one to hone in on the sound of ones heartbeats hence its name.

    ~Restriction~
    -Extremely Loud noises can disrupt the viewers ability to sense their opponent
    -Sensory Overload can occur if a loud enough noise causing the user intense pain and stops completely the users sense of hearing for 3 turns
    -It takes a turn to hone in on target
    -Can only be used by Swizzik & Hawiianmike

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist. Cannons at that.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by BluePhenix View Post
    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Ekitei) – Summoning Technique: Ekitei
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Ekitei is a Bengal monitor who specializes in spying techniques such as camouflaging. He is normally the size of a regular adult Bengal monitor but will usually transform into the size of a lizard in order to hang/fuse to someone’s back and follow him (like a parasiting technique), his weight being so light that this person won’t know or suspect anything. While he does so, he will camouflage himself and be completely unseen from regular eyes. Moreover, he will convert his chakra to make it look as if he is nothing but a part of the chakra emanating from the body of the one he hangs to, thus deceiving sensory techniques like Chakra Sensing Rain and sensory abilities like the sharingan. When he is summoned, it will appear as a fail as he will already be in camouflaged mode (i.e. he will be the size of a lizard and hanging/fused to the summoner’s back, as well as camouflaging into the summoner’s chakra and hidden from regular eyes). There, he will keep check of any disturbance in the summoner’s chakra flow and release him immediately from any genjutsu. He also serves as eyes in the back of the summoner and makes it impossible for the summoner to be surprised by an attack from a blind angle, communicating such relevant information by sending signals to the summoner through his chakra system.
    Note: Can only be summoned by those who have signed the Bengal Monitor contract.
    Note: The summoner of Ekitei must be Sannin rank or above.
    Note: Camouflaging will not deceive a Byakugan user.
    Note: Can only release the summoner from A-rank genjutsu and below.
    Note: Being on the back of the summoner, Ekitei is unaffected by regular genjutsus as long as his presence is undetected, and he is unaffected by visual genjutsus since he doesn't make eye contact with the opponent.

    ~Declined~ Re-work the part about it being attacked unnoticed and letting out similar chakra to the one he attach to. To do so, he would have to suck on the target's chakra and let it out again as a camouflage. Even then, sensory type ninja and doujutsu user would see it.
    Quote Originally Posted by BluePhenix View Post
    Thanks for the feedback and for approving my summoning boss Ekitenshu. For the below resubmission, I have integrated the changes requested, except for the concealing part. As I was initially looking for a technique to help counter sharingan users more easily, I have reworked it by adding a new concept instead of making Ekitei suck on the user's chakra. The changes are highlighted in blue and bolded, hope it works out now. ^_^

    Custom Summoning

    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Ekitei) – Summoning Technique: Ekitei
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Ekitei is a Bengal monitor who specializes in spying techniques such as camouflaging. He is normally the size of a regular adult Bengal monitor but will usually transform into the size of a lizard in order to hang/fuse to someone’s back and follow him (like a parasiting technique), his weight being so light that this person won’t know or suspect anything. While he does so, he will camouflage himself and be completely unseen from regular eyes. Moreover, he has developed a unique ability known as "Rainbow Chakra" which lets him change the color of his chakra to match that of the one he hangs to, in order to make it look as if he is nothing but a part of the chakra emanating from the body of that person. This lets him remain unnoticed even to a sharingan user as this ability will deceive the sharingan's ability to see through techniques via analyzing chakra colors. When Ekitei is summoned in battle, it will appear as a fail as he will already be in camouflaged mode (i.e. he will be the size of a lizard and hanging/fused to the summoner’s back, as well as camouflaging into the summoner’s chakra and hidden from regular eyes). There, he will keep check of any disturbance in the summoner’s chakra flow and release him immediately from any genjutsu, as well as watch for any attacks coming from the summoner's back, alerting him of such dangers in a timely manner. Thus, while Ekitei is active, it is very hard to catch the summoner off-guard through the use of genjutsu and/or sneak attacks from his back.
    Note: Can only be summoned by those who have signed the Bengal Monitor contract.
    Note: The summoner of Ekitei must be Sannin rank or above.
    Note: Camouflaging will not deceive a Byakugan user.
    Note: Camouflaging will not deceive sensory techniques that makes use of physical conditions other than visual ones, such as Chakra Sensing Rain which makes physical contact, or the Inuzuka's smelling senses.
    Note: Can only release the summoner from A-rank genjutsu and below.
    Note: Being on the back of the summoner, Ekitei is unaffected by regular genjutsus as long as his presence is undetected, and he is unaffected by visual genjutsus since he doesn't make eye contact with the opponent.
    sensory techniques like Chakra Sensing Rain and sensory abilities like the sharingan.

    ~Declined~ We do not work with chakra colors in our system, please re-work that part.

    I don't think you need to be so specific as to how you could camouflage your summon. Since he's very small and doesn't weight anything, if he's stuck to the enemy's back, only a doujutsu such as the Byakugan could notice it considering it's in his blind spot. Also, if you're summoning it on your back, then the Sharingan won't notice it because your own chakra is shielding him.
    Resubmitting. Removed the specific parts which you considered useless and added your suggestion in blue. ^_^

    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Ekitei) – Summoning Technique: Ekitei
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Ekitei is a Bengal monitor who specializes in spying techniques such as camouflaging. He is normally the size of a regular adult Bengal monitor but will usually transform into the size of a lizard in order to hang/fuse to someone’s back and follow him (like a parasiting technique), his weight being so light that this person won’t know or suspect anything. While he does so, he will camouflage himself and be completely unseen from regular eyes. When Ekitei is summoned in battle, it will appear as a fail as he will already be in camouflaged mode (i.e. he will be the size of a lizard and hanging/fused to the summoner’s back, as well as camouflaged to deceive regular eyes). There, he will keep check of any disturbance in the summoner’s chakra flow and release him immediately from any genjutsu, as well as watch for any attacks coming from the summoner's back, alerting him of such dangers in a timely manner. Thus, while Ekitei is active, it is very hard to catch the summoner off-guard through the use of genjutsu and/or sneak attacks from his back.
    Note: Can only be summoned by those who have signed the Bengal Monitor contract.
    Note: The summoner of Ekitei must be Sannin rank or above.
    Note: Camouflaging will not deceive a Byakugan user. For sharingan users, they will only be able to notice Ekitei if the person he hangs to shows his back to them.
    Note: Camouflaging will not deceive sensory techniques that makes use of physical conditions other than visual ones, such as Chakra Sensing Rain which makes physical contact, or the Inuzuka's smelling senses.
    Note: Can only release the summoner from A-rank genjutsu and below.
    Note: Being on the back of the summoner, Ekitei is unaffected by regular genjutsus as long as his presence is undetected, and he is unaffected by visual genjutsus since he doesn't make eye contact with the opponent.

    ~Approved~

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    Custom Weapon

    (Toriniti-Kaosu) – Chaos Trinity
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Varies with Hellraiser Techniques being used
    Chakra cost: Varies with Hellraiser Techniques being used
    Damage points: Varies with Hellraiser Techniques being used
    Description: Cain, a spirit of darkness, and Azael, a spirit of light, belonged to a realm of demons and angels where their ambitions led them to unite in order to overthrow their respective masters and reshape the world under their own rule. However, their opponents prevailed over them and they were condemned to execution. To survive, Cain and Azael fled their realm and reincarnated into a black sword and a white sword respectively. The swords look like twin ones in order to reflect their similar lust for war and power, and their powers can only be used when they are being wielded. The three of them (Cain, Azael and their wielder) are referred to as the Chaos Trinity when they fight together, and are able to perform techniques classified as Hellraiser Techniques.
    Note: The wielder of Cain and Azael must be Sannin rank or above.
    Note: Hellraiser Techniques can only be used once per turn. They count as a move and must be submitted separately for approval.
    Note: Cain and Azael will draw and stock up chakra from their wielder in order to enable him/her to perform techniques without hand seals. As such, the wielder’s other abilities will not be inhibited when performing with the swords.
    Note: Cain and Azael can only be wielded by BluePhenix and people he lends them to, provided they meet the requirement.



    Below you will see some examples of Hellraiser Techniques.

    Hellraiser Techniques

    The following techniques are related to my custom weapon. Grateful if you can review them even if you are declining the custom weapon as it is now, so that I can rework and resubmit all of them simultaneously to avoid any duplicate work for you.

    ~Approved~

    (Reizu Makai: Hakachi) – Hellraiser Technique: Graveyard
    Note Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 20 per turn
    Description: The user will thrust Cain into the ground and a wave of cross-shaped blades will overwhelm the battlefield by spreading onto the surface from the user’s position to the end of the battlefield. If they come across a vertical ridge on the battlefield, the blades will keep on spreading onto it till they cover its sides and top. Same goes for a fissure; the blades will cover the ridges of the fissure and continue towards the end of the battlefield. The shape of the blades make the battlefield looks like a graveyard, and they stand close enough to each other to prevent the opponent from fighting on the ground unscathed, whether or not he’s moving to dodge (see damage points above). Protection from Cain makes it so that the blades will disappear and reappear around the user to let him or her move without taking damage.
    Note: Can only be used/taught by BluePhenix.
    Note: Can only be used in Chaos Trinity Mode.
    Note: Can only be used three times per battles.
    Note: No other Hellraiser Techniques in the same turn.
    Note: Hellraiser Techniques demand a life force sacrifice each turn that they are active, i.e. -10CP and -10HP to the user per turn.

    ~Declined~ OP. Why is this even Forbidden? No risk for the user and no physical drawbacks? Fix that or make it S-rank while lowering the abilities. Also, your restrictions are way off for a forbidden technique, you need to be close to chakra exhaustion on the next turn to so restrict the jutsu you can use.

    (Reizu Makai: Yomi) – Hellraiser Technique: Underworld
    Note Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 20 per turn
    Description: The user will thrust Cain into the ground and the underground of the battlefield will turn into a hall of hell due to lava, formed from fire chakra melting the earth, coursing and dripping out everywhere. Once the new stage is set, the surface will weaken and crumble, taking the user and his opponent to continue their battle there. In this new stage, underground motion techniques will be impossible due to the lava, wind techniques will be weakened by two ranks due to the area taking better advantage of its elemental weakness, water techniques will be weakened by one rank due to vaporization, and fire techniques will be strengthened by one rank. Also, flying ashes will be constantly doing damage to the opponent (see damage points above). Protection from Cain makes it so that the ashes deviate from the user when drifting around.
    Note: Can only be used/taught by BluePhenix.
    Note: Can only be used in Chaos Trinity Mode.
    Note: Can only be used three times per battles.
    Note: No other Hellraiser Techniques in the same turn.
    Note: Hellraiser Techniques demand a life force sacrifice each turn that they are active, i.e. -10CP and -10HP to the user per turn.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ OP and a similar technique already exist.

    (Reizu Makai: Harumagedon) – Hellraiser Technique: Armageddon
    Note Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 20 per turn
    Description: The user will throw Azael in the air similarly to a boomerang, and the sword will then fix itself above the user in the sky and begin to rotate faster, generating and spreading special clouds all over the battlefield. The clouds are made from mixed fire and lightning and prevent anyone and anything from flying any higher than short range from the battlefield’s surface. Any attempt to ward off the clouds will be difficult, i.e, the combination of fire and lightning is stronger than any lightning or fire attacks on their own, earth and wind attacks will suffer from elemental weaknesses, and water attacks will be weakened due to the high heat pressure causing evaporation. The special clouds generate a highly acid rain all over the battlefield, which will constantly damage the opponent (see damage points above). Protection from Azael will make it so that the sword always moves right above the user as the location below the sword is the only spot where acid rain droplets will not fall.
    Note: Can only be used/taught by BluePhenix.
    Note: Can only be used in Chaos Trinity Mode.
    Note: Can only be used three times per battles.
    Note: No other Hellraiser Techniques in the same turn.
    Note: Hellraiser Techniques demand a life force sacrifice each turn that they are active, i.e. -10CP and -10HP to the user per turn.

    ~Declined~ What's with all those OP techniques!? Re-read what I said above concerning F-rank technique and lower the abilities of this technique.
    Resubmitted. I thought the life force sacrifices were enough to make them Forbidden rank, my bad. I've adjusted them to S-rank. ^_^

    (Reizu Makai: Hakachi) – Hellraiser Technique: Graveyard
    Note Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 20 per turn
    Description: The user will thrust Cain into the ground and a wave of cross-shaped blades will overwhelm the battlefield by spreading onto the surface from the user’s position to the end of the battlefield. If they come across a vertical ridge on the battlefield, the blades will keep on spreading onto it till they cover its sides and top. Same goes for a fissure; the blades will cover the ridges of the fissure and continue towards the end of the battlefield. The shape of the blades make the battlefield looks like a graveyard, and they stand close enough to each other to prevent the opponent from fighting on the ground unscathed, whether or not he’s moving to dodge (see damage points above). Protection from Cain makes it so that the blades will disappear and reappear around the user to let him or her move without taking damage.
    Note: Can only be used/taught by BluePhenix.
    Note: Can only be used in Chaos Trinity Mode.
    Note: Can only be used three times per battles.
    Note: No other Hellraiser Techniques in the same turn.
    Note: Hellraiser Techniques demand a life force sacrifice each turn that they are active, i.e. -10CP and -10HP to the user per turn.

    (Reizu Makai: Harumagedon) – Hellraiser Technique: Armageddon
    Note Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 20 per turn
    Description: The user will throw Azael in the air similarly to a boomerang, and the sword will then fix itself above the user in the sky and begin to rotate faster, generating and spreading special clouds all over the battlefield. The clouds are made from mixed fire and lightning and prevent anyone and anything from flying any higher than short range from the battlefield’s surface. Any attempt to ward off the clouds will be difficult, i.e, the combination of fire and lightning is stronger than any lightning or fire attacks on their own, earth and wind attacks will suffer from elemental weaknesses, and water attacks will be weakened due to the high heat pressure causing evaporation. The special clouds generate a highly acid rain all over the battlefield, which will constantly damage the opponent (see damage points above). Protection from Azael will make it so that the sword always moves right above the user as the location below the sword is the only spot where acid rain droplets will not fall.
    Note: Can only be used/taught by BluePhenix.
    Note: Can only be used in Chaos Trinity Mode.
    Note: Can only be used three times per battles.
    Note: No other Hellraiser Techniques in the same turn.
    Note: Hellraiser Techniques demand a life force sacrifice each turn that they are active, i.e. -10CP and -10HP to the user per turn.

    ~Both Declined~ While I did say to lower them to S-rank if you didn't wanted to add restrictions, I also said they were OP. Where are the changes to fix that?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Sakurifaisu Kuchiyose - Vlad) : Summoning: Sacrificial Summon - Vlad
    Type: Summon
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    This is a secret Gull summoning only known to Sacrifice after he stumbled upon the Gull's secret temple lost ages ago during the "Great Flame Wars" between the Gulls and the Crows. As he entered the temple, he found an ancient codex written by a Gull, he found this surprising because this codex was small and most Gulls were much larger. As he read the codex, he found an old key. He searched the temple for days until he found a key slot in which he placed the key in and suddenly he was teleported to an island, On this island a statue of stone stood. The statue somewhat resembled a Gull but was smaller and was able to stand upright...he read the name on the codex "Vlad" the statue started to lose it's rock texture and Vlad appears in all his glory. Vlad is about the size of Gamakichi so the user is able to right on him, only one person though, he's very fast and quite strong. Vlad has a complete mastery over Fire, he can use them without handseals and have its power increased. Vlad is able to cover his body in fire and absorb all fire techniques up to A-Rank .Vlad has a secret technique which allows him completely cover him in fire and release a "Forbidden Rank" explosive fire orb directly at the target causing everything in that area up mid to long range to be under a sea of fire, in turn destroying everything in the area. This causes him to be completely exhausted and will no long to be on the battlefield for the remainder of the battle.

    Notes:
    - Summon lasts 4 turns
    - Absorbs twice per battle
    - Summon released after Ultimate attack is used
    - Must have signed the Gull contract
    - Only usable by Sacrifice.. & those he allows.

    ~Declined~ No F-rank summons will be allowed, summons can use up to S-rank, no "absorbing an element" as it's been done countless times and would fall under the category of "similar techniques already exist".
    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Sakurifaisu Kuchiyose - Vlad) : Summoning: Sacrificial Summon - Vlad
    Type: Summon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    This is a secret Gull summoning only known to Sacrifice after he stumbled upon the Gull's secret temple lost ages ago during the "Great Flame Wars" between the Gulls and the Crows. As he entered the temple, he found an ancient codex written by a Gull, he found this surprising because this codex was small and most Gulls were much larger. As he read the codex, he found an old key. He searched the temple for days until he found a key slot in which he placed the key in and suddenly he was teleported to an island, On this island a statue of stone stood. The statue somewhat resembled a Gull but was smaller and was able to stand upright...he read the name on the codex "Vlad" the statue started to lose it's rock texture and Vlad appears. Vlad is about the size of Gamakichi so the user is able to ride on him, only one person though, he's very fast and quite strong. Vlad has a complete mastery over Fire, he can use them without handseals and have its power increased which makes him great for combination attacks with the user. Vlad has a secret technique which allows him completely cover him in fire and release a "S Rank" explosive fire orb directly at the target causing everything in that area up mid to long range to be under a sea of fire, in turn destroying everything in the area.

    Notes:
    - Summon lasts 4 turns
    - Vlads Fire Techniques are increased by +5 (not the users though)
    - Fire Techniques count as a move
    - Must have signed the Gull contract
    - Only usable by Coyote & those he allows.

    ~Declined~ Restrict the usage on that special ability, and like I said, summons can only use S-rank max, so do change the bold part please.

    New Contract:
    Summoning Animal: Coyote
    Scroll Owner: Coyote
    Other Users who have signed contract: Zancrow
    Summoning Boss if existing: Upon Approval
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Upon Approval

    ~Approved~

    (Tsuchi Kumori Kasane Roppou) - Earth Shadows Pile Up
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    While wearing "The Earth Shadows Cestus" the user with literally put his hands into the ground like he's grabbing it. He then pulls up a large amount of Earth from the ground about10 feet high and 20 feet wide. Then they slam they earth back into the ground with such force and power that from that point of the earth being slammed into the ground, the ground will erupt upwards with several spikes that move in a wave from short to mid-range. The spikes go up about 15 feet high.

    Notes:
    - Must wear "The Earth Shadows Centus"
    - Unable to use another Doton tech in same move
    - Only usable by Sacrifice..

    ~Declined~ Please elaborate on the technique, do the spikes emerge all around the user or in a specific direction (range would be the width of the wall and up to mid?).
    (Tsuchi Kumori Kasane Roppou) - Earth Shadows Pile Up
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:
    While wearing "The Earth Shadows Cestus" the user with literally put his hands into the ground like he's grabbing it. He then pulls up a large amount of Earth from the ground about 15 feet high and 20 feet wide. Then they slam they earth back into the ground with such force and power that from that point of the earth being slammed into the ground, the ground will erupt upwards with several spikes will move in a wave from short to mid-range in front of the user (not a 360 degree circle). The width of the spike wave would be 20 feet long and the spikes rise 15 feet high. Basically the wave of spikes erupt up from the point of the user to mid-range, sort of like the whipping of a rug.

    Notes:
    - Must wear "The Earth Shadows Centus"
    - Unable to use another Doton tech in same move
    - Can only be used 3 times per match
    - Only usable by Coyote

    ~Approved~ Added a restriction.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    kasai-meruto sakini (Fire style Melt Away)
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:50
    Chakra Damage:N/a
    Description: The user does 3hand signs. once the signs are done the user slams one hand on the ground sending his fire chakra to the oppenents feet. causing the earth under the oppenents feet to melt and harden. making your oppenent get stuck in the earth
    -Notenly can be used 4times
    -Note:After i use the move i cant do any other elemental move but fire
    -Note:Stays in turn for 2 turns

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
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    Kasia- kaen kusari (Fire Style-Blazing Chains)
    Rank:A
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:35
    Damage points:70
    Description: The User does 3 hand signs. after that i slam my hands together making 5 blazing chains appear from underground. wraping around the oppenets neck/arms/legs. burning them. and restraining them from moving as the chains are pulling down. kinda like shikamarus shadow sewing.
    -Note: Only use Twice
    -Note: Chains can be broke by using any rank water jutsu on the chains. Hot Metal+Water=rust (i think) but yea.
    -Note:Cant use any fire rank jutsu above A the next go around

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
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    Kasia kaen hensei (Fire style Blazing Formation)
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points:80
    Description:I do 1 hand sign. as i do. 4 blazing poles appear around the oppenet in a square formation. as it does i then do 5hand signs. igniting each of the polls. making a fire wall to each poll making it like a fire wall where the user cant get out.. after that is complete. i then do 1 more hand sign. sending all the fire from each poll into the middle causing an explosion 10ft in height (The square is 10ft wide also)
    -Note:Cant use no fire jutsu for 2turns afterwards
    -Note:Can only use B-rank or lower fire jutsus for the whole battle after use
    -Note:Can only be used Once
    -Note:Can break through the fire walls with A-Rank Water or S-Rank Wind
    -Note:If jutsu is to close to me i take half the damage

    (Edit or add or take away ANYTHING if needed or wanted)
    can be used by teno757 and sadako

    ~Approved~
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Yard~ View Post
    (Hayaton No Jutsu)- Swift Release: Swift Technique
    Type: Supplement
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user through the use of swift release will perform the "Boar" handseal and move from Short to mid range. This technique is similar to that of shadow-less flight and can be used to dodge certain attacks by using swift release to quickly move out of the range of the attack similar to how other jutsus like Doton no jutsu let's you escape certain attacks by moving out of range or out of the way of certain jutsus. This can be preferred over other jutsus that can allow this due it's much faster and is still pretty basic. The user can escape attacks that for one, he can track, attacks that are projectile-ish but not huge attacks like kirin. The user could dodge an attack like fireball jutsu however, the attack that the user dodges cannot be wider than 10meters in circumference. Otherwise the user would still be hit due to the user can only travel by 10meters since this technique is short to mid range so this cannot be used to dodge large scale techniques. This would allow someone to dodge Amaterasu at a split second due to this being a variation of shadowless flight which has incredible speed, as well as attacks that are like blasts as long as they aren't large scale as said before due to his has a 10meter range limit.
    - Can't use wind or lightning jutsus in the same turn.
    - Can't use any other swift techniques in the same turn.
    - Can only be used 3X per match.
    - Must have a swift release bio.


    The reason I said it could dodge Amaterasu is due to wiki actually saying it's instant speed while still being able to be tracked by 3T due to current rp rules. It can be tracked by 3T but it's still instant which leads wiki to believe that swift release may consist of the body flicker technique and some other element manipulation to push it further and seeing as Raikage could dodge Amaterasu with body flicker + his armor which I think that this would give a similar result as it's not as fast as raikage armour but it's still extremely fast. But If you think that part should be deleted, feel free to ^^

    ~Declined~ First of all, you were referring to diameter, not circumference. Secondly, while swift was said to make the user virtually invulnerable to taijutsu, I think the applications to ninjutsus are being grossly misused.

    I've had a talk with both Cali and Zen and since we want to avoid people abusing Swift as an alternative to the gates, anything that we judged to be slightly OP will be declined. With or without reason (it pains me to say that).


    After reading the note, I've decided this will be my only swift technique that involves movement. Anything else will most likely be regular taijutsu based moves.

    (Hayaton No Jutsu)- Swift Release: Swift Technique
    Type: Supplement
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user through the use of swift release will perform the "Boar" handseal and move from Short to mid range. This technique is similar to that of shadow-less flight and can be used to dodge certain attacks by using swift release to quickly move out of the range of the attack similar to how other jutsus like Doton no jutsu let's you escape certain attacks by moving out of range or out of the way of certain jutsus. This can be preferred over other jutsus that can allow this due it's much faster and is still pretty basic. The user can escape attacks that for one, he can track, attacks that are projectile-ish but not huge attacks like kirin. The user could dodge an attack like fireball jutsu however, the attack that the user dodges cannot be wider than 10meters in diameter. Otherwise the user would still be hit due to the user can only travel by 10meters since this technique is short to mid range so this cannot be used to dodge large scale techniques only small projectile like techniques like fireball jutsu, Fire Style: Exploding Flame Shots and other small scale projectile like techniques, as well as few attacks that are like blasts as long as they aren't large scale as said before due to this has a 10meter range limit so any attack that is 10 meters in diameter would still hit you if you try to use this as a counter.This jutsu would allow someone to dodge small Amaterasu flames, but not large scale flames that are 10 meters in diameter or flames that appear all around/cover you as there has to be away to escape out of it. This jutsu would only allow you to dodge the same type of techniques that Doton no jutsu can allow you to dodge, only this is much faster.
    - Can't use wind or lightning jutsus in the same turn.
    - Can't use any other swift techniques in the same turn.
    - Can only be used 3X per match.
    - Must wait one turn before using again.
    - Must have a swift release bio.

    ~Approved~ I think you made it clear you couldn't dodge projectiles that are wider then 10 m








    (saigo rizo-to fuu issai kibou rosuto) Last Resort Method: All Hope Is Gone
    Type: Supplement
    Rank: F
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: (-10 each turn)
    Description: The user will place himself under genjutsu like trans that will allow him/her to order his brain around sort of like when you are hypnotized except this allows you to be conscious enough to give your brain commands, he/she will release the restraints the brain places on the human bodies muscles and can then use their maximum capabilities unlike gates where the user pushes their muscles beyond capabilities with use of chakra. The user will then release small amounts of chemicals in the brain while this genjutsu is still active, these chemicals are:

    Endorphin: It's the brain's painkiller, and it is 3 times more potent than morphine. It makes it so the user will not feel pain from reaching their limits and keeps them a little under control of their emotion/sanity.


    Serotonin: It makes the user obsessed with the current thought going through the users mind, and since they are in battle, it makes the user obsessed with killing the opponent. This could be a slight draw back but the main point is for the user to lose any caring of the damage he/she does to his/her body.


    Norepinephrine: It increases the users motivation drastically, making them want to exceed their limits and they will accomplish this easily.

    Dopamine: It affects brain processes that control movement, emotional response, and ability to experience pleasure and pain. All of these chemicals are natural chemicals that affect our bodily processes. Besides being involved in the process of low Serotonin levels are believed to be the reason for many cases of mild to moderate depression which can lead to symptoms like anxiety, apathy, fear, feelings of worthlessness, insomnia and fatigue.


    Epinephrine: (also known as adrenaline) is a hormone and a neurotransmitter. It increases heart rate, constricts blood vessels, dilates air passages and participates in the fight-or-flight response of the sympathetic nervous system. Chemically, epinephrine is a catecholamine, a monoamine produced only by the adrenal glands from the amino acids phenylalanine and tyrosine. It has the ability to keep runners running for hours at a time without taking a break and has given some the ability to lift cars.

    These are small amounts, small enough so that the user won't over dose themselves but will still have a great effect on their body after the effects wear off. The user will gain a great speed increase of 3X their current speed with increased reaction time. But while they are hypnotized they cannot move, they must stand still to obtain complete focus. The user commands their brain/body to release these chemicals at once which also snaps them out of the genjutsu. This technique could be used to keep fighting
    Notes:
    - Can only be used once per match.
    - Lasts 3 turns.
    - The user takes -10 damage per turn and cannot cancel this mode meaning they will take 30 damage.
    - Speed will take a dramatic decrease after this mode is over. The user will be in so much pain, he/she will barely be able to move or even stand straight. This is for the rest of the battle.
    - The user can only use A rank while in this mode.
    - User can only use two techniques per turn while in this mode.
    - This mode will take 1 turn to activate and the user must stand still, placing using the genjutsu to activate all of this. They will require the use of a shadow clone to defend.
    - Can only use 2 elemental ninjutsu per turn when this mode is active, no basic ninjutsu or genjutsu can be used during this mode.
    - Activating this mode counts as 2 of the users 3 moves per turn.
    - This is a last resort method, the user basically becomes so damaged and overwhelmed from the effects of this jutsu, they become almost paralyzed for the rest of the battle, hardly able to move to the point of not being able to perform hand signs.

    ~Declined~ First of all, the moment I read a reference to the gates, it was an instant no.

    Secondly, members don't seem to realize that genjutsus don't order the brain around, it deceives the senses. One of the only I could possibly see happening is the Endorphin because it's produced when the body feels natural pain or injuries. It's designed so you can forget about the pain long enough to take care of it (evolution is awesome). However, if you did such a jutsu (designed to give you pain), I'd still decline it because it already exist, it was submitted by SY. Also, while you did give some good chemical explanation for 3 of those 5, 2 were obviously adapted by you (which kind of defeat the purpose of putting official descriptions).

    Re-submit something "correct" in term of Narutoverse and I will check it.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦



    kaen-shimo (Blaze-Frost Blades)
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:30
    Chakra Damage:60
    Descritpion:These swords where said to be made in Space. Void. made to counter each other. Blaze and Frost. the blue handled sword is frost and the red handled sword is blaze. they are made from material that is not yet discovered. The blade sword is as hot as 100 degress. and Frost sword is as cold as -20. the sword grants a mutual degree coating to the users hands so the person wont freeze nor burn his hands. these swords arent really meant for attacking as for cutting the chakra level. each sucusefull swing cuts down a chakra rank which your oppenent can use. (Example. i cut some1 with either of my swords. they are unable to use Srank fire, i cut them agen they cant use A-rank fire. etc)
    -Note:Can only cut up to 3 chakra elements
    -Note:Can only cut them up C rank elements
    -Note:Grants +5 speed if you use one at a time
    -Note:Can only use Earth element while swords are activated
    -Note:Can only cut one element pr turn
    -Note:Cant cut through KG elements (lave,ice, wood. etc)

    ~Declined~ OP. Need I say why?

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    Summoning Animal: Chaos The Yiger
    Scroll Owner:Teno757
    Other Users who have signed contract: None Atm
    Summoning Boss if existing:Chaos The Yiger
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:None ATM



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    Summoning Technique: (ranmyaku za Yiger) Chaos the Yiger
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Chakra Damage:80
    Descirption: By doing 5hand seals and drawing blood and whiping the blood on the "Esper tattoo" on your arm you summon this creature and he appears from the ground. it is about 15 ft long. it was said to be a mutated yak-antlion-tiger his armor is made of Iron. Chaos floats but due to his weight he can not fly. Chaos barley uses his magic. but he is very skilled in swordsmanship. each of his blade is infused with 1 element. (Fire,Water,Lightning,Earth). the swords levitate around his body.. he can swing his swords up to mid range. also he speacailizes in S-rank fire. He can not be phased by Earth Jutsus below S-rank. Also. He also has like shell type armors on the outside of him. which he can shield himself with by closing them in on his body. making him immune to any iron-gold sand under S rank (A-rank and below) and physical attacks
    -Note:Can only stay for 4 turns
    -Notence he is summoned on the field i can only use 2 jutsus instead of 3
    -Note: Due to his large body and large body mass. he is not very fast so he cant avoid most jutsus
    -Note:Can only go in his shell Twice
    -Notenly teachable by Teno757. must have Esper Tattoo to summon it

    (Edit any of these 2 if you see fit or please take anything out if you see fit once more)

    ~Declined~ We don't accept mythical creatures anymore, or whatever that summon is.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Ame unsou no Jutsu) Rain Transportation Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user focuses water chakra throughout their body and breaks down into rain drops. The rain drops then quickly shoot up into the clouds above where the user is free to move throughout the clouds. They then rain down in the desired location where they reform their body. This happens fairly fast, but is nowhere near instantaneous. It takes several seconds to move from one location to the other being logically longer depending on the distance travelling. While preforming this technique the user is susceptible to being scattered, blown away or evaporated. They can't preform any techniques until they reform and must reform in the same turn the technique is used.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Cannot use any other techniques before reforming.
    -Must reform during the same turn.
    -Rain clouds must be present.

    Declined. you mention that it takes tome for you to travel from one location to another, but not how long it takes to break apart, go into the sky, come back down, and reform into a human form. Also, what happens if you do happen to get scattered or evaporated?

    (Ame tou Shinigami) | Rain Sickle Death God
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user preforms two hand seals and then swings the sickle end of their kusarigama towards the target. As the blade travels it becomes coated rain drops that form into a massive sickle made of rain. The sickle is incredibly sharp and capable of slicing through A rank or below earth.
    -No other rain techniques that turn.
    -Requires an active rain storm.
    -Can only be used twice.

    Declined. It appears that you are still holding the chain of the kusarigama since you said you "swing it" and not "throw it", so there is no way that weapon could reach long range. it would be extremely combersome to fight with all that chain around you. typical chains are way less than 5 meters in length which is short range. Also rain is composed of water which is weak to earth so, yes, it could slice through A ranked earth, but the technique would be disrupted in the process, which should be noted.


    (Epikku sono Gilgamesh) | Epic of Gilgamesh
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: 100 (-20 to user)
    Description: This technique is one of the most feared rain techniques ever created and has become the inspiration for numerous flood myths throughout history. The user chains together a string of hand seals while releasing a massive amount of water chakra throughout the ground and into rain clouds. The rainstorm quickly becomes a monsoon as the earth throughout the battlefield begins to crack and release water. The down pour of rain rapidly combines with the water leaking from the earth and forms into a rampaging flood that washes over the battlefield in front of the user. The raging torrent is large enough and powerful enough to turn an entire village into a barren field of mud leaving nothing in its wake. The user is the epicenter of the technique with the flood expanding outward from their location reaching long range in each direction.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Requires an active rainstorm.
    -No Rain or Water techniques for the next three turns.
    -No Forbidden techniques for the next two turns.
    -No S ranked techniques the next turn.
    -User suffers twenty damage.

    Declined. Forbidden ranked techniqes need to have some sort of drawback which is what makes it forbidden. we both know "20 damage" means nothing when it comes to a fight.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kairai Ginou: Reberu)-Puppet skills: Raven
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Raven is ~Johninto Uchiha~ first puppet. He looks like a normal human, only there's two small diferances: His nose it a bit to long and his feets are huge, giving him a perfect balance, improving his aim. Raven carries hidden in his mouth senbon so that the user can have them launch at the opponent. Raven also has a hole in both hands and at the user's will shurikens will launch out at the opponent.

    ~Approved~

    (Kairai Ginou: Wani)-Puppet skills: Gator
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Gator is ~Johninto Uchiha~ defensive puppet. He looks like a normal alligator but a little bit bigger. Gator carries hidden in his mouth and end of his tail senbon so that the user can have them launch at the opponent. Gator's tail can also open up as a shield to protect the user. If you use his shield then it counts as one of your 3 turns.

    Declined. you must specify the rank of the shield and how many times it may be used.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Inchato View Post
    (Hyoton: Mō Fubuki No Ikari)-Ice Release: Wrath of the Blizzard
    Type: Offensive, Supplementary
    Rank: B Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user performs two hand seals and spreads their chakra to the snow falling from the sky that they created and manipulate it to turn the snowflakes to become slightly larger, and turn into ice. These enlarged, icey snowflakes have razor sharp edges and are capable of piercing one's skin and drawing blood, although they don't have the potency to render serious injuries, unless one loses to much blood. Due to the lack the ice having less wind resistance, they fall to the ground faster, and thus gain the momentum they need to pierce one's skin. Due to the amount of iceflakes hitting both the opponent and the user, if left unprotected the victims can sustain a large amount of blood loss and pain.
    Note: Requires the user to have snow created by "(Hyouton no Jutsu) Ice Release Technique", falling from the sky.
    Note: The user is equally prone to the flakes.
    Note: When the iceflakes touch the ground, they turn back into snow.
    Note: Lasts three turns.
    Note: Can only be used twice.
    Note: Must remain inactive for three turns before the user is able to reuse.

    ~Declined~ The idea behind this jutsu is cool, but it's still raw. IMO (which you can follow or not) the snowflakes need to be made much bigger, directed and accelerated using your wind chakra toward your enemy. Right now I just don't see it happening, it's just too far fetched. I live in Canada, so I know ice storms and ice in general, and it would never get enough momentum on it's own to cut me.
    Resubmitting:
    (Hyoton: Mō Fubuki No Ikari)-Ice Release: Wrath of the Blizzard
    Type: Offensive, Supplementary
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: After first using Hyouton no Jutsu, the user performs two hand seals and releases an Icy gust of wind which pushes the falling flakes at extreme speeds and while covering them with ice to make them about an inch tall and razor sharp. These enlarged, icey snowflakes are capable of piercing one's skin and drawing blood, however, if they hit the ground, they will break apart harmlessly. If the snow is not caught in the gust of icy wind, it will fall normally.[/b]
    Note: Only one gust of wind can be created, although, this gust can be curved infinitely according to the user's will.
    Note: The user is equally prone to the flakes, should he get caught in the gusts.
    Note: Lasts two turns.
    Note: Can only be used once,but the user can control the wind gust during the second turn of use.
    Note: Due to the amount of chakra and attention this jutsu requires, the user can only use one other jutsu the turn this jutsu is activated, and on the turns that this jutsu remains active.
    Note: Only usable by Inchato.

    I was once again unsure on the size. If a half inch is to much/to little, feel free to edit. And thanks for your help on this one. ^_^

    ~Approved~

    Oh man, this one is all over the place as far as the description and notes go. I cleaned it up some. It had everything there, it just didnt flow well and there were WAY to many pointless notes that should have been in the description. I only did this because you had a good idea, but you seemed to have a little problem getting it put into words. Let me know if this is what you were thinking. If this isnt what you imagined, feel free to resubmit.

    I will not be doing this for everyone



    New:
    (Hyoton: Reitō no Kami no Hari Chiryō)-Ice Release: Acupuncture of the Frozen Gods
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user touches his index finger to his thumb and focuses their ice chakra between them, and creates a needle made of ice. The user then focuses a great surge of ice chakra into the needle, and manipulates the shape of the needle to rapidly elongate in a straight direction at a high speed. The tip of the needle is razor sharp, and the ice it is made out of is dense. Because it is a needle and is very thin, if the needle were to be pointed at someone since it was created, they would have no way of knowing it was there, unless they had a doujutsu or some other chakra sensing ability.
    Note: After the needle is completely done elongating, it is very brittle, and can be shattered with relative ease, although, while it is elongating, the needle is very dense.
    Note: On the turn after this jutsu is used, the user is unable to perform S-Rank or higher Ice jutsu, due to the amount of ice chakra used to surge the needle forward.
    Note: Can only be used twice.
    Note: Only usable by Inchato.

    With the above jutsu, I'd like to point out that the ice is not transparent, and the needle would be fairly easy to see if viewed from all angles, with the exception of the view in which the viewer is staring directly at the tip of the needle.

    Declined. A needle that thin would be extremly brittle even while it was being made. if it is brittle when it has finished growing it should be brittle throughout the whole process since it cant bee seen then whole time.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by black uchiha View Post
    Resubmits
    Please edit where needed

    (Konchu sutairu: Chakura no ezuke) Insect Style: Chakra Feeding
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80 (if feed on directly)
    Description: The user has a selection (of his choice) of his insects, to feed on/devour any available chakra (I.e. his chakra, chakra strings, chakra shields...etc) effective up to S-rank. In doing this, the insects increase their power(+10 to bug attacks) & durability(+10 meaning they would be able to survive something they normally wouldn’t fire/lightning of the same rank as the bug tech used the next turn).
    -Non-elemental chakra only
    -Power-ups only work on the bugs that ate the chakra

    -Can only use 3 times per battle
    -No other S-rank bug techniques in the same move
    -Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

    ~Declined~ OP. You can basically block an S-rank attack with this and instead of killing the bugs, it makes them stronger? Re-work this jutsu.

    New submits

    (Ninja āto: Chakurasutingā) Ninja Art: Chakra Stingers
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user sends chakra into his/her hands and makes 30 stingers (wasp sized) on/around each hand. If the user strikes the opponent with his/her stinger covered hand, the body part/area that was stung; swells up and can’t be used for 2 turns. Stingers can also be shot at the opponent.
    -Swelling only last 2 turns
    -Stingers only last 2 turns
    -Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

    ~Declined~ Elaborate, it is poison related?
    Resubmits
    In this one its only on chakra based attacks, not element (like you told me to say), the way I see it is the bugs are weak to every element (as you say in your weakness thread ) and they naturally eat chakra so they should naturally be strong against pure chakra techs, as they ate kunkuro’s chakra strings in the manga Here and here, they also were able to stop the chakra infused air blast by plugging up the holes (which one would assume that theses small bugs couldn’t stop such a powerful blast, so one would also assume that they ate some of the chakra out of the tech to be able to do so) Here . So please recheck it with this in mind


    (Konchu sutairu: Chakura no ezuke) Insect Style: Chakra Feeding
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80 (if feed on directly)
    Description: The user has a selection (of his choice) of his insects, to feed on/devour any available chakra (I.e. his chakra, chakra strings, chakra shields...etc) effective up to S-rank. In doing this, the insects increase their power(+10 to bug attacks) & durability(+10 meaning they would be able to survive something they normally wouldn’t fire/lightning of the same rank as the bug tech used the next turn).
    -Non-elemental chakra only
    -Power-ups only work on the bugs that ate the chakra
    -Can only use 3 times per battle
    -No other S-rank bug techniques in the same move
    -Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

    Declined. do not resubmit. your logic in that example is flawed. Do you think those bugs would be able to stand up against a rasengan? I dont think so. Chakra strings do not attack the bugs, they are supplementary. The bugs didnt absorb any of the chakra with the sound guy, they were just "hole corks".


    This one is not poison, it’s just injection of chakra, like a bee sting but without the toxin.

    (Ninja āto: Chakurasutingā) Ninja Art: Chakra Stingers
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user sends chakra into his/her hands and makes 30 stingers (wasp sized) on/around each hand. If the user strikes the opponent with his/her stinger covered hand and injects their chakra into the opponent, the body part/area that was stung; swells up and can’t be used for 2 turns. Stingers can also be shot at the opponent.
    -Swelling only last 2 turns
    -Stingers only last 2 turns
    -Not poison, it’s just injection of chakra
    -Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

    Declined. if its not poison then its too similar to gentle fist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    Its been a complete week and few hours since my last Submission

    Resubmitting, with restriction

    (Fuuton: Zennou Clap) - Wind Stye: Almighty Clap
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user spread his arms and then clap with all his power in the direction of target. The huge amount of wind blows with wind blades in that direction, making the opponent flow with it by giving him the injury due to wind blades and/or repelling any fire style jutsu upto A-rank with double the speed and effect, as it has affinity and polarity towards fire.
    Note: ~Cannot use any wind technique in same turn.
    ~Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ What didn't you understand when I said "lower the abilities"? Adding restrictions doesn't change the fact that this technique is OP.
    ______________________________
    Summoning Animal: Terrapin
    Scroll Owner: Enzup
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing:N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A

    ~Approved~
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    (Hulk Mo-Do) - Hulk Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User passes his chakra to each cell of his body and expands the size of cells and thus user's body also gets expanded by almost double size. So that he looks like a monstor and his power and physical strength becomes 10 times then a normal shinobi. And after that he passes doton chakra to make his body even harder than diamond and because of physical strength and hardness he does not have any effect of earth techniques.
    While in this mode he can take instant jumps upto 30m height and moves to any range and when landing from sky, he can destroy everything on earth's surface by punching it, within its range. His speed increases tremendously which is comparable to the raikage's speed while lightning armour activated. In this mode user can't use any of the basic 5 elements except earth and lightning (hardness and speed). He gives double damage points to any taijustu move and 50% more to other moves, and receives 50% less damage to any jutsu and does not have any effect of jutsus upto C-Rank due to the toughness, power, physical strength and hardness.
    Note: ~Can only be used once per battle and lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Biggest demerit of this mode is that after entering in this mode, user can't use basic 5 elements except earth and lightning.
    ~After this mode is over each and every cell of user's body starts paining him very hard for next 2 turns.
    ~User gets exhausted and fatigue due to which his speed decreases by 2 levels.
    ~User can't use any jutsu above B-Rank for next 2 turns.
    ~User gives 20 less damage points and receives 20 more damage points and requires 20 more chakra points, for any jutsu.
    Just try imagining him in skin color, instead of green color.




    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Just no.
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    Resubmitting, in a complete different manner

    (Buki: Yoshimitsu's Dyuaru Heika) - Weapon: Yoshimitsu's Dual Swords
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: These are the two swords i.e. green and crimson red, which were wielded by yoshimitsu and then passed down to Enzup. It is believed that they were the swords of the lightning God (green) and fire god (crimson red) which are sharper than laser. These both swords are flexible, and no-one can even touch these swords without user's will and if someone tries to do so then it will give shock(green sword) or will burn(crimson red sword) that person's hand. So, that person can't hold it anymore.

    Not much is known about the crimson sword till now.

    The Green Sword has its affinity towards lightning and can use upto A-rank lightning. And also the Sword can protect the user from any lightning jutsu as the user will intake the lightning jutsu of the opponent in his sword and will pass that lightning to the ground by stabbing the ground with his sword, or that lightning can be used in combo with combining it with other element like water, but that jutsu (which has to be combined with the opponent's lightning) has to be used instantly after intaking the opponent's lightning.

    The user can spin any sword very fast in clockwise direction, then user can fly by facing the sword in upward direction, just like helicopter's blades.
    Note: ~User can block any lightning jutsu by passing it in ground. User can do this to all lightning jutsu because he is not absorbing it, he is just simply passing it underground.
    ~Can be put in bio, or if summoned then lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Can only be summoned 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.




    ~Declined~ Sharper then lasers, flexible swords, protecting the user from any lightning, all those makes it unacceptable. Take out the part where you can absorb lightning, many swords can already do that so yours is a rip off.
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    Resubmitting, removed the activation part

    (Ninjustu: Chakra Akuma) - Chakra Demon
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 (if got hit by sword or claw)
    Description: The user releases his pure chakra from the whole body and shapes it in the form of a creature by using shape manipulation that surrounds and protects the user as it can act on his own. The chakra manipulated demon always remains with the user. The chakra demon has a sword in his right hand and chakra claw in his left hand, which can be used to attack or defend. This chakra demon has a total of 200 health, so in order to destroy it, one must give him 200 damage points, and also chakra demon can cut through some earth techniques using his sword and block some by using claw.
    Note:~Does not have any effect of ninjutsu.
    ~Can't use any ninjutsu while chakra demon is on battlefield.
    ~Lasts untill destroyed.
    ~As the moment the chakra demon is destroyed, user gets exhausted and fatigue due to which his speed decreases by 1 level for next 2 turns.
    ~20 More chakra will be required to perform any jutsu for next 2 turns.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    Its just the simple shape manipulation of pure chakra.
    Look of Chakra manipulated demon



    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Anything even slightly related to Susanoo will be instantly declined.




    Resubmitting, removed the part- wind blades and gives injury

    (Fuuton: Zennou Clap) - Wind Stye: Almighty Clap
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user spread his arms and then clap with all his power in the direction of target. The huge amount of wind blows in that direction, making the opponent flow with it and/or repelling any fire style jutsu upto A-rank with double the speed and effect, as it has affinity and polarity towards fire.
    Note: ~Can be used 2 times for S and A rank and 2 times for below ranks, per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    And plz Edit the first "Note" if needed.

    Declined. The elements advantage over each other isnt something you can change. Therefore, S-ranked wind techniques should not overpower A-ranked fire and push it back twice as fast. The best it can do is block it.
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    Resubmitting, removed the part- flexible and sharper then laser, and you said that "no more lightning absorbing", but i am not absorbing it, if you read carefully.

    (Buki: Yoshimitsu's Dyuaru Heika) - Weapon: Yoshimitsu's Dual Swords
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: These are the two swords i.e. green and crimson red, which were wielded by yoshimitsu and then passed down to Enzup. It is believed that they were the swords of the lightning God (green) and fire god (crimson red). No-one can even touch these swords without user's will and if someone tries to do so then it will give major shock(green sword) or will burn completely(crimson red sword) that person's hand. So, that person can't hold it anymore.

    Not much is known about the crimson sword till now.

    The Green Sword has its affinity towards lightning and can use upto A-rank lightning. And also the Sword can protect the user from any lightning jutsu as the user will intake the lightning jutsu of the opponent in his sword and will pass that lightning to the ground by stabbing the ground with his sword, or that lightning can be used in combo with combining it with other element like water, but that jutsu (which has to be combined with the opponent's lightning) has to be used instantly after intaking the opponent's lightning.

    The user can spin any sword very fast in clockwise direction, then user can fly by facing the sword in upward direction, just like helicopter's blades.
    Note: ~User can block any lightning jutsu by passing it in ground. User can do this to all lightning jutsu because he is not absorbing it, he is just simply passing it underground.
    ~Can be put in bio, or if summoned then lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Can only be summoned 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    Side Note: If you have played the game taken 3 with/aginst Yoshimitsu, then you must have watched his flying technique using his sword.

    Declined. Your response to Izuna's reason for declining your swords really pisses me off. He already told you that swords already had that ability and to take it out but you ignored him by stating that its "redirected" and not "absorbed". the point of the matter is that it essentially blocks you from every lightning technique which is a huge problem with me. and The way you described the technique, it IS absorbed since you have to first catch it, and then stab it into the ground to release it. Fix what Izuna originally told you to fix.
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    Side Note: "Terrapin" belongs to the "Turtle" family.

    (Terrapin: Juudai Myu-tanto Ninja Kame) - Terrapin: Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user claps both his hands and summons 4 ninja turtles of almost same height as of user. They are advance form of terrapin, who can even stand on their feets. Who were trained by their anthropomorphic rat sensei in the art of taijutsu. So they are taijutsu master and specialist and can use Taijutsu upto S-Rank. They can only be harmed by jutsus above C-Rank, beacuse of their hard and tough shell.

    Leonardo (Leo) is the courageous leader of the group and as such, and devoted student of martial arts, the most balanced turtle. He concerns himself mostly with his training and meditation. While this leads him to be the most disciplined of the Turtles, it can also be a shortcoming. He is the oldest of the four and the most skilled fighter of the turtles. He wears a blue mask and wields two Japanese katana swords as his weapons.



    Raphael (Raph) is the hothead of the group. He often lets his anger get the best of him as he has an aggressive nature and struggles to cope with some of the tougher issues the Turtles face. He is an intense fighter. He would much rather rush into action than contemplate the best move. He works on his anger to some degree. He wears a red mask and wields two sai.



    Michelangelo (Mike or Mikey) is easy-going and free-spirited. Michelangelo provides much of the comic relief. He is youngest of the four Turtles. He often refers to he and his brothers as superheroes. While he loves to relax and eat pizza, this Turtle also has an adventurous and creative side. He carries a skateboard. Michelangelo wears an orange mask and wields a pair of nunchaku.



    Donatello (Don or Donny) is the knowledgeable scientist, inventor, engineer, and technological genius. Donatello is perhaps the least violent Turtle, preferring to use his knowledge to solve conflicts. Often endeavors to retain the enemies technology to make enhanced gear for the turtles. He is responsible for creating the shell-cell (a cell-phone like communicator) and Battle Shell (the Turtles's enhanced tactical vehicle) among other devices. He wears a purple mask and weilds a traditional bō staff as his weapon.



    Note: ~Must have signed the contract with "Terrapin".
    ~Can only be summoned once per battle and lasts for 5 turns.




    Declined. use the propper naming template. you forgot to mention it was a summoning technique
     
         
    Last edited by Scary Yamato; 10-25-2011 at 05:01 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    My First submission ever. So Plz edit wherever needed for approving the jutsus.

    (Fuuton: Su-pa Janpu) - Wind style: Super Jump
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Long
    Type: Supplementary
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: While bending the legs at an angle, user contrates a huge amount of wind chakra in his legs, and then releases it, resulting in a super jump upto 20m height in an instant in any direction the user wants.
    This technique can also be used to jump from short to mid or from mid to long range and vice versa.
    Note: Can only be taught by Bolt.
    Note: Can only be used 4 times per match.

    ~Approved~ Added a restriction.

    (Doton: Chi Kori) - Earth Style: Earth Hardening
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Type: Defense/Supplementary
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User puts his hand on earth and then hardens the earth beneath him and in the area within short range, So that opponent can't use that earth to perform any jutsu and any earth justu of him will not work on the hardened earth.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Fuuton: Naibun Hishou Waza) - Wind Style: Secret Flying Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user concentrates a large amount a wind chakra in his feets and releses it from beneath the feets, which results in a huge opposite force, which raises the user from earth and enables the user to fly, at any height the user wants. Speed of user when flying is comparable to the falcon bird.
    Note: ~User has to continuously release the wind chakra from beneath the feets to continue flying.
    ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.
    Just an illustrative example


    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Doton: Kubo Tama) - Earth Style: Hollow Sphere
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user puts his hands on earth and makes a hollow sphere around himself in which he traps himself. As user is in the sphere, he can roll it anywhere in battlefield with great speed.
    Note: ~Can't stay in for more than 3 turns, beacuse of insufficient oxygen.
    ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.

    ~Approved~ Took out the part about using it on your opponent and controlling the sphere.

    (Suiton: Mizu Izumi) - Water Style: Water Fountain
    Type: Offense/Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user slams his hand on earth and make a strong fountain beneath the enemy, the water fountain is upto 20m high, and it takes the enemy along with it.
    Note: ~As the moment the water fountain attains the height of 20m, it vanishes.
    ~Can only be used 5 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.

    ~Approved~
    (Fuuton: Naibun Hishou Waza) - Wind Style: Secret Flying Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases wind from each spore of his body in downward direction, which results in a huge opposite force, so that his body get lifts and rises from earth's surface and enables the user to fly, at any height the user wants.
    Note: ~User has to continuously release the wind to continue flying.
    ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.

    Declined. This custom already exists
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    (Raiton: Hisan Ikkakujuu) - Lightning Release: Flying Unicorn
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a flying unicorn from his lightning chakra by, which can use lightning jutsus upto B-Rank from his horn. While running on ground he is very fast just like horse and while flying in sky he is just fast as bird. But when running in sky while flying, his speed gets increased.
    User can sit on the unicorn as rider.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.



    Declined. add a restriction stating that it counts as a move when the unicorn uses a technique
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    (Fuuton: Hisan Ikkakujuu) - Wind Style: Flying Unicorn
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a flying unicorn from his wind chakra by compressing wind chakra, which is very stable and can use wind jutsus upto B-Rank from his horn. While running on ground he is very fast just like horse and while flying in sky he is just fast as bird. But when running in sky while flying, his speed gets increased.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.


    Declined. add a restriction stating that it counts as a move when the unicorn uses a technique
     
         
    Last edited by Scary Yamato; 10-26-2011 at 08:04 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Proteus View Post
    Its more then 10 days since my last Submission.

    (Genjustu: 100 kuro-n) - A 100 Clones
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User shows his enemies a genjustu, in which he shows that he creates a 100 clones around his enemies, which are exact copy of him, including his chakra and everything. As the user will do something like justu or body movements, the clones will do the same thing at the same time. So it will be impossible for enemy to judge the original user. And if user uses some jutsu, so will clones will use that jutsu, and enemy will take the damage from all the justu.
    Note: ~Lasts untill enemy gives user a injury.
    ~Can be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by proteus.


    ~Declined~ Check the bold part, this tells me you don't quite understand how genjutsus work. Re-work.
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    (Doton: Rokku Boudai) - Earth Style: Rock Expansion
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20 (or depends on size)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: After focusing on his doton chakra, the user expands the size of any rock or earth in battlefield.
    Note: ~Chakra will be proportional to the expansion size.
    ~Can only expand by doubling the size or upto a mini bus size.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Proteus.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
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    (Doton: Iku Batsu) - Earth Style: Several Attacks
    Type: Offense
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: The user creates 25 small squirrels made up of earth, anywhere in battlefield, whose eyes are linked with user, and user can blast every single of them one by one or together by making a single handseal. The blast which is made is of 1m radius.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Proteus.

    ~Declined~ OP and a mix of already approved technique. The only difference in your custom is that you used squirrels.
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    (Doton: Tenkan Hando) - Earth Style: Converting Hand
    Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A (+5 for each bite)
    Description: The user slams his hands on earth and pulls out a 15m giant hand made of earth near him, which lifts the user and puts him at safe place within its reach to prevent from a incoming attack of the enemy. And just after that, that hand converts into several small rats, which spreads around the field, whose eyes are connected to the user, which can bites.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Proteus.

    ~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

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    (Doton: Hisan Tori) - Earth Style: Flying Bird
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a akamaru size bird, made up of earth, which can fly with the speed of normal bird. And user can use that bird for flying in air.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Proteus.

    ~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

    Try to search this thread before submitting jutsus which are very common.
    (Genjustu: 100 kuro-n) - A 100 Clones
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User shows his enemies a genjustu, in which he shows that he creates a 100 clones around his enemies, which are exact copy of him, including his chakra and everything. As the user will do something like justu or body movements, the clones will do the same thing at the same time. So it will be impossible for enemy to judge the original user. And if user uses some jutsu, so will clones will use that jutsu.
    Note: ~Lasts untill enemy gives user a injury.
    ~Can be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by proteus
    Removed the part which you told me to remove.

    Declined. I feel that if I approve this you will misinterperate what it actually should be. What this should be is a variation of the bunshin no jutsu which makes "projections" of the user to confuse the enemy. I feel like you are trying to use this as a multi-shadow clone jutsu. If you truly want this to be a genjutsu then take out the part about it having the exact same chakra because that doesnt matter in a genjutsu, which is what is casing my concern since you didnt know that. But you need to know that doujutsu users will be able to see through this.

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    (Genjutsu: Rui Shibu) - Thin Branches
    Type: Offense/Supplemantery
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60 (Due to thorns)
    Description: User shows his enemies an illusion in which they are completely trapped/tied in thin branches with thorns on it, as they are completely tied they can't even move a single finger. The branches starts spreading on their body and grabs the neck and then enters in the stomach through mouth.
    Note: ~Lasts untill enemy gives user a injury.
    ~Can be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by proteus.

    declined. Similar technique exists. see tree binding death
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    (Genjutsu: Dekisui Gogyou) - Drowning Water
    Type: Supplemantery
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User shows his enemies an illusion in which they have completely drowned in water, due to which they cant breathe and their body falls numb (in illusion), and cant do anything and finally falls asleep.
    Note: ~Lasts untill enemy gives user a injury.
    ~Can be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by proteus.

    Declined. Similar technique exists.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Mephisto)-Mephisto
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Points: 40
    Damage Points: (40 by normal attack, 80 special attack)
    Description: Mephisto is a legendary weapon which origins are unknown. Tales tell that it comes from the God of Hell himself, forged with his own blood and effort. Other stories tell that was created by Masters of the Dark arts, which enable them to create this terrifying weapon.
    The weapon has mysterious abilities, such as the capacity to absorb/cut through ninjutsu. The user receives -5 of damage every-time he absorbs (such as Fire and Lightning) or cuts through elemental attacks, supposedly because the wielder of the weapon suffers from Hell itself.
    By absorbing an attack, the user is able to channelize this attack through his sword, and amplify it with his own chakra, making his attack an equivalent of an S-rank technique. Depending on the element (or non-element) absorbed, the user is able to shot the wave of energy of the same affinity.
    The user is unable to absorb other techniques until he has liberated the previous technique absorbed.
    -The sword can cut through B-ranks and below, but it counts as one of the three moves.
    -The user is able to absorb A-rank and below ninjutsu, up to three times, and counts as one of the three moves.
    -The sword is indestructible, though, it doesnt mean it can cut through everything
    -The sword can only be handled by Gin, anyone else that tries to get a hand on it will be shocked by lightning enough to let go of the sword
    -Only Gin-San can use this sword


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ I don't know what's not clear when I post:"No cutting/absorbing through element" and "no wave/blast shot from a weapon". Those have been done dozens if not hundreds of times (yes, hundreds lol), I will not accept any sword/weapon that does it, it's simply ripping it off for those who got it accepted.

    (Genjutsu: Kusari no Makai)- Illusionary Technique: Chains of Hell
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will rise his hands and put his opponent under a genjutsu. Under the genjutsu, chains will rapidly emerge from the ground and trap the opponent's hands, and at the same speed they emerged, they will pull downwards, pulling the enemy with them, restricting the opponent from connecting his hands together or stand up. This genjutsu lasts for one turn, in which the opponent is unable to move.
    -The user has to be able to see the opponent
    -No genjutsu for three turns after this technique is used
    -Can only be used once
    -Can only be taught by Gin-San

    ~Declined~ I like the effect, but change how you cast it. Use hand seals and then raise your hand while having visual contact of your target.

    (Kuchiyose: Kea Seijins: Meros and Sarah) Summoning: Kea Sages: Meros and Sarah
    Type: Summon
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: N/A (-10 by summoning them)
    Description: After extracting some blood and making the necessary handseals, the user can summon the Kea Sages. Both have been trained specifically in their element on affinity almost their entire lives, and have mastered even the most destructive jutsus. Sarah is able to use S-rank and below Wind jutsus, proving her vast knowledge in water jutsu. Meros is able to use S-rank and below Fire jutsus. Their wings are designed in such way, that they are able to make handseals (their wings have 5 feathers, this 5 feathers are used like fingers to make handseals). Even though they are masters in their own field, they are old, so their capacity to fly at high speeds have decade, and they are only able to fly in a slow-mid paced speed. The user can summon both Keas in his shoulders, or in the ground, depending in where the Keas are summon. If the Keas are summoned in the user's shoulders, they will strongly close their claws in the user's skin, sticking them in place (by doing so, the user loses -5 of health, but does not affect his perfomance). The Keas are unable to fusion to the user, has they aren't able to combine genetically.
    -Can only be used once per battle
    -Can only stay in the battlefield for 5 turns
    -Summoning them counts as two of the three moves in the turn they are summon.
    -Each of their moves count as a move
    -The user is unable to summon other Keas while they are still in the field, the user is unable to summon any Kea for two turns after they leave the battlefield.
    -The user is unable to use higher than A-ranks for one turn after they leave the battlefield.
    -Can only be summoned by those who hold the Kea contract
    -Can only be taught by Gin-San

    ~Declined~ No forbidden summoning, no summoning underground. You probably want to re-work the restrictions now that it isn't forbidden.

    (Fuuton: Kaze Bakuyaku Reiki) Wind Release: Wind Explosive Aura
    [Type: Defensive/Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will stand in position in an aggressive posture then release a massive amount of wind chakra through the ground. The user can look at the opponent without a problem, but the opponent can only see the user as a dark blur with glowing red eyes. By doing so, Wind will burst upwards into the air, with the user inside of the burst. The user will receive -10 of damage from the burst of air do the chakra strain. If the opponent comes closer and closer to the burst, the opponent will feel weaker and weaker, losing self-confidence and falling in the ground, stunning him for one turn. This defense can defend against Forbidden and below Lightning (except Kirin) and S-rank Wind Jutsus. If the opponent is caught in the burst area, he will be stunned and suffer moderate cuts in the flesh. The burst though, is highly flammable and can combust with B-rank fire and above.
    -Can only bee used twice
    -Can only be used once every 3 turns
    -The user is not able to use above A-rank wind and lightning in the next turn
    -No other wind jutsus in the same turn do chakra restrain
    -Can only be taught by Gin-San

    ~Pending~ Just to make sure (the description wasn't that clear and neither was the video ), you're surrounding yourself in a giant cocoon of wind that keeps flowing upward right? This cocoon is highly flammable and can hurt the opponent if he gets close right? Make what I just asked clearer in your next submission and take out the bold part.

    Seen in :37



    Inchato gave me permission to alter Frigid Wind


    (Fuuton: Gokkan No Kaze)-Wind Release: Frigid Wind
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user makes two hand seals and manipulates the air above an opponent to move down upon them at a high speed. As the air moves down, several small, thin blades of razor sharp wind currents are created, which will cut into the opponent as the wind hits them, slicing into their body and causing external and internal damage.
    - This does not necessarily have to be created over an opponent's head.
    - Can only be used thrice per battle.
    - Can only be taught by Gin-San

    ~Declined~ When re-submitting/altering a jutsu, you need to put the changed part in bold or explain what you took out.
    (Kuchiyose: Kea Seijins: Meros and Sarah) Summoning: Kea Sages: Meros and Sarah
    Type: Summon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: N/A
    Description: After extracting some blood and making the necessary handseals, the user can summon the Kea Sages. Both have been trained specifically in their element on affinity almost their entire lives, and have mastered even the most destructive jutsus. Sarah is able to use S-rank and below Wind jutsus, proving her vast knowledge in water jutsu. Meros is able to use S-rank and below Fire jutsus. Their wings are designed in such way, that they are able to make handseals (their wings have 5 feathers, this 5 feathers are used like fingers to make handseals). Even though they are masters in their own field, they are old, so their capacity to fly at high speeds have decade, and they are only able to fly in a slow-mid paced speed. The keas can be summoned in the user's shoulders. If the Keas are summoned in the user's shoulders, they will strongly close their claws in the user's skin, sticking them in place (by doing so, the user loses -5 of health, but does not affect his perfomance). The Keas are unable to fusion to the user, has they aren't able to combine genetically.
    -Can only be used once per battle
    -Can only stay in the battlefield for 4 turns
    -Summoning them counts as two of the three moves in the turn they are summon.
    -Each of their moves count as a move
    -The user is unable to summon other Keas while they are still in the field, the user is unable to summon any Kea for two turns after they leave the battlefield.
    -The user is unable to use higher than A-ranks for one turn after they leave the battlefield.
    -Can only be summoned by those who hold the Kea contract
    -Can only be taught by Gin-San

    Declined. just add one more note saying that they cant fly while making handseals since they use thier feathers as fingers.

    (Fuuton: Kaze Bakuyaku Reiki) Wind Release: Wind Explosive Aura
    [Type: Defensive/Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will stand in position in an aggressive posture then release a massive amount of wind chakra. The user will surround himself in a giant cocoon of wind that keeps flowing upward. The user can look at the opponent without a problem, but the opponent can only see the user as a voracious humanoid creature (though the shape of the person is not altered, and does not affect the opponent at all). The user will receive -10 of damage from the burst of air do the chakra strain. This defense can defend against Forbidden and below Lightning (except Kirin, unless the user activates the cocoon before the preparations for Kirin are finished, such as the final handseals for Chidori),S-rank Wind Jutsus and A-rank and below Water jutsus (the blast will direct the water upward). If the opponent is caught within the area of the cocoon, he will be blasted back and cut moderately. This cocoon is highly flammable, being able to be caught in fire with B-rank Fire jutsus and above.
    -Can only be used twice
    -Can only be used once every 3 turns
    -The user is not able to use above A-rank wind and lightning in the next turn
    -No other wind jutsus in the same turn do chakra restrain
    -Can only be taught by Gin-San

    Seen in :37


    ~Approved~

    Inchato gave me permission to alter Frigid Wind
    (Hyoton: Gokkan No Kaze)-Ice Release: Frigid Wind
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user makes two hand seals and manipulates the air above an opponent to move down upon them at a high speed. As the air moves down, several small, thin blades of razor sharp ice are created, which will cut into the opponent as the wind hits them, slicing into their body and causing external and internal damage.
    Note: This does not necessarily have to be created over an opponent's head.
    Note: Can only be used thrice per battle.
    (Fuuton: Gokkan No Kaze)-Wind Release: Frigid Wind
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A-Rank
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user makes two hand seals and manipulates the air above an opponent to move down upon them at a high speed. As the air moves down, several small, thin blades of razor sharp wind currents are created, which will cut into the opponent as the wind hits them, slicing into their body and causing external and internal damage.
    - This does not necessarily have to be created over an opponent's head.
    - Can only be used thrice per battle.
    - Can only be taught by Gin-San

    Decined. Many similar techniques exist... I know from personal experience being on the receiving end of them
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Yonseijinyajuu)- Four Saint Beasts
    Type: Puppets
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (If summoned)
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: The Four Saint Beasts are puppets made by, The Mad Hatter. The Mad Hatter once said after making them "If used by the right puppet master, they coud take down a forest in a single night." Each of the four puppets have their own abilities, weapons, and appearence to match them, they all are able to detach most of their body parts from one another, with no visable joints to the opponent.

    ~~ First and Slowest but most durable of the puppets is, Genbu the Stone Beast, he is made from hardened wood wrapped in iron, covering every part of his body, standing 7ft, with a large shell covering his whole back like a tortois, that is able to pop open from his tail and stand like its connected to his neck; his arms positioned in a knuckle walk position like an ape; clawed toes like a dinosaur; the segmented tail of a snake and the spiked; tusked primitive face of an ogre with large white eyes with small black pupils, with a bold black kanji on his forehead standing for power 力.
    Genbu




    ~~ Second is the most muscluer looking puppet and hairiest, Byakko the White Toger, Byakko is made of solid metal with hidden conpartments hidden under his fur like cover, standing just under Genbu, he takes the appearance of a large humanoid tiger with a mane-like sea green hair that flows down his back with light bluish fur with grey stripes on his arms, in both of his shoulders are hidden poles with 5 blades attached to the pole that spin able to cut boulders in half, also another set in his knees, with his two bottom canine teeth large enough to reach up his cheeks, in Byakko's throut is a hose that release blasts of water from it, he has a preloaded shuriken in his mouth, he is able to shoot them from his mouth, around the hose in his throut. He has yellow eyes with red pupils and a kanji symbol for beast on his forehead 獣. He wears a toga and what appear to be leg warmers in animal skins of the leopard, and has a red sash as a belt.
    Byakko

    ~~ The Third and most human looking besides the greenish blue skin is Seiryu the Blue Dragon, Tall and slim, Seiryu is the only normal sized one of them all, while possessing pale green skin and black facial hair hiding holes in his head which will release wires from them able to perice through rocks and trees with ease. His blue martial arts robe is tied at the waist by a large white strap and features the image of a blue dragon wrapping around his shoulder. To match his robe, Seiryu wears a dark, blue cap covering just the top part of a symbol on his forehead for ice 氷, and on his feet he wears a simple pair of black shoes, from Seiryu's left arm has a chakra sheild installed in it, while in his right arm he has a powerful vaccum hose installed in his palm that is able to blow and suck.
    Seiryu



    ~~ Last and smallist of the Four Saint Beasts, Suzaku Ho-oh, Suzaku is made of a milable steel, has a lightning chakra that the user inject into Suzaku at the begining of the puppets useage, has long orange hair parted down the middle, with two red strands that are actually his antennae, which are able to launch at the opponent with a cord attached to them, having full control over the antena the puppeteer will use them to attack the opponent at free will, between the antennae is a kanji symbol for speed 速. Suzaku also has polls that will extened from his palms to the ground, will senbon loaded in each of his fingers that are able to be thrown by Suzaku waving his arm in the direction.
    Suzaku

    ~ Only Two of the Four Saint Beasts can be used in one turn.
    ~ Each of the Four can only use one of there weapons. each turn.
    ~ Can only be used by ~Depp~

    Declined. I like the puppets but thier description needs more work. your last puppet with the lightning states that it has lightning chakra infused but you dont mention what it can do with it. you need to clearly list out the abilities of each puppet and separate them from the description of the puppet itself, because right now I have no clue as to what the full capabilities of the puppets are. Make sure that attacks involving one of the elements or vaccum count as a move in the turn, and give a comparative rank to the elemental attacks and shields
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Igneel View Post
    ~Resubmitting ~

    Sution:nurunuru bunpi|Water Release:Slimy Bunpitsu|
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra:30
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user secretes a slimy fluid from his body by using his suiton chakra which coats the user thickly not covering the users nose ,mouth and eyes.The advantages of this slimy stuff is that the user cannot be harmed by taijutsu as the slimy substance will absorb all taijutsu blows of A-rank and below and some would slip though the users skin due to the slime and also earth.The user cannot be harmed by ordinary kunai's or slashs or cuts from blades.The user is free to do other jutsu's while covered in this slime.While in this form the users speed is reduced by 1lvl.

    Note:
    • Can only be used 2 times per battle
    • Lasts for 1 turn after activating the slimy substance
    • Cannot use any suiton jutsu's of S-rank for the next 2 turns
    • Can only be taught by igneel


    i hope i've changed enough

    ~Declined~ Take out the part about being invincible to blades. Being slimy won't change the back that a left to right slash would cut you in half or that a stab would pierce you.

    Fuuton:Sandoicchi|Wind Style:Sandwich|[/B]
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Range:Short-long
    Type:Attack
    Description:The user channels fuuton chakra into the air and does 3 handseals and as he does the first handseal, wind walls of dimensions 15m X 10m start to from on the the front and rear side of the target and when he does the second seal the wind wall finishes forming(the wind wall is not visible to naked eye,only doujutsu users can see it) and when he does the 3rd seal the walls move towards the target at high speed and the two wall will collide in 2 seconds,trapping the target in middle restraining his movements and also the target will have multiple fractures

    Note:
    • Can only be used 2 times per battle
    • Must have mastery over wind
    • cannot use any wind jutsu in the next turn
    • can only be taught by igneel


    ~Declined~ You only added the size of the walls, and they're simply too big. 25m squared is huge. Re-read what I said on your last submission and apply it.

    Kyōka Suigetsu
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    Type:Weapon
    Rank:S
    Range:Short
    Chakra:50(-10 per turn as long as the user hold Kyōka Suigetsu in his hands )
    Damage:+5 to all raiton jutsu's
    Description: Kyōka Suigetsu is the ancient sword that was awarded to Igneel by the kage of kumogakure. Kyōka Suigetsu is said to be the Sword made from a thunderbolt and can only be wielded by True warriors.As long as the user holds Kyōka Suigetsu in his hands,Kyōka Suigetsu sucks the users raiton chakra(10 points per turn)and coats herself with this chakra,thereby making the sword much more sharper such that she could slice through anything except diamond hard substances.Kyōka Suigetsu has the ability to absorb raiton jutsu's of A-rank and below and gets coated with lightning chakra such that bolts of lightning could be seen surrounding the sword.The bolts last for 1 turn and if the user uses the sword to cut the opponent now,it will make the opponent numb.

    • Can only be wielded by Shisui and if anyone else touches the sword a 1000V current strikes the wielder
    • Can cut through all elemental jutsu's of B-rank and Below(except fuuton only C-rank fuuton jutsu's can be cut) and can absorb A-rank Lightning
    • Cutting through jutsu's and absorbing lightning jutsu's count as a move
    • Cannot use any Fuuton jutsu's of A-rank and above as long the user holds Kyōka Suigetsu in his hands.
    • Kyōka Suigetsu sucks the user chakra 10 points per turn
    • When the sword is unsheathed the user cannot use any jutsu of S-rank in the same turn
    • Absorbing opponents jutsu's count towards one of the users turns


    ~Declined~ Take out the part where you absorb an element, there's enough sword that does that already to call yours a rip-off. A 1000v discharge if your opponent touch it? That's an instant kill and it's OP, take it off. Define cutting through jutsu, can it cut through more than lightning jutsu? Cutting anything that isn't Diamond-like? What about other swords that coat themselves with lightning? Take out that part and replace it by something more trivial like: "Can cut through most materials as it's extremely resistant".

    Gesshirui Mo-Do |Rodent Mode|
    Rank:S
    Range:Short
    Type:Supplementart
    Chakra:40
    Damage:+15 to ninjutsu
    Description:The user does the confrontation handseal and waits for 15-20sec and draws in chakra from the ground( energy from the ground) and the users chakra substantially increases not as much as seen in sage mode.The user must have ground contact to enter the mode.After Entering the mode,the users ears becomes similar to martens getting enhanced hearing and as long as the user is standing on the ground,he/she could sense others who are standing on the battle field.The users speed gets an amazing boost and his/her reflexes becomes as fast as minato's.The hands get covered in marten hair and the user nails elongates to form something similar to claws seen in marten and these claws are smei-retractable and the claws allow the user to scratch his target which would inflict deep wounds the.The user can also smell anything or anybody within mid-range due to his/her enhanced nose.If the user looses ground contact,he/she must retain ground contact in the same turn or the mode disappears.And as long as the user is stationary he/she is immune to genjutsu of B-rank and below as there is constant flow of chakra from the ground to the user while the user is stationary

    • can only be used once per battle
    • must have signed marten contract and can only be given to others if both lili-chwan and igneel agrees
    • lasts for 4 turns
    • the user becomes exhausted after the mode disappears and cannot use any S-rank jutsu's in the next


    ~Declined do not resubmit~ No human/animal hybrid mode and all in all this jutsu is just a rip-off of many already existing modes.

    Fuuton:Awa Anki|Bubble Fate|
    Rank:A
    Type:Supplementary
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra:30
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user concentrates on his fuuton chakra and then does 2 handseals and creates bubbles made of wind around the opponents hands.These Bubbles restrict the Opponent from using handseals or holding stuff.These bubbles are very strong and if the opponent tries to spew out fire to destroy the bubble,he/she may result in burning his/her own hands.So while the buuble restricts the opponent he can only use jutsu's which don't require handseals.

    • Must have mastery over wind
    • can only be used 2 times per battle
    • lasts for 2 turns


    ~Declined~ I like that one, but why would the bubble make it impossible to make hand movements? And in order for you to keep this active, you'd have to keep focusing chakra into them, taking away 1 of your moves per turn. Also, we don't accept jutsu that takes immediate effect on your opponent, find a way to make it happen near the opponent so he can react and defend.
    Sution:nurunuru bunpi|Water Release:Slimy Bunpitsu|
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra:30
    Damage:N/A
    Description:The user secretes a slimy fluid from his body by using his suiton chakra which coats the user thickly not covering the users nose ,mouth and eyes.The advantages of this slimy stuff is that the user cannot be harmed by taijutsu as the slimy substance will absorb all taijutsu blows of A-rank and below and some would slip though the users skin due to the slime and also earth.The user cannot be harmed by ordinary kunai's or shurikensThe user is free to do other jutsu's while covered in this slime.While in this form the users speed is reduced by 1lvl.

    Note:
    • Can only be used 2 times per battle
    • Lasts for 1 turn after activating the slimy substance
    • Cannot use any suiton jutsu's of S-rank for the next 2 turns
    • Can only be taught by igneel


    Declined. Didnt Izuna tell you to take out the part about now being harmed by blades? like he said, just because you are slippery doesnt mean you cant be cut. I get what you are going for here but its not all there. I can assure you if I gave you a roundhouse kick to the side, being slippery wont matter. you need to add description about twisting the body so blows slide past the user. Theres more but you need but I'm not going to alter it completely ebcause its not my CJ :/

    Fuuton:Sandoicchi|Wind Style:Sandwich|[/B]
    Chakra:30
    Damage:60
    Range:Short-long
    Type:Attack
    Description:The user channels fuuton chakra into the air and does 3 handseals and as he does the first handseal, wind walls of dimensions 25m X 25m start to from on the the front and rear side of the target and when he does the second seal the wind wall finishes forming(the wind wall is not visible to naked eye,only doujutsu users can see it) and when he does the 3rd seal the walls move towards the target at high speed and the two wall will collide in 2 seconds,trapping the target in middle restraining his movements and also the target will have multiple fractures.Although the wind walls are invisible to naked eye,if the opponent is facing the user he will be able to sense the strong wind which goes to from the wall behind his back,but can only feel the strong the wind and nothing else and will be unaware of the wall infront of him

    Note:
    • Can only be used 2 times per battle
    • Must have mastery over wind
    • cannot use any wind jutsu in the next turn
    • can only be taught by igneel


    If both walls are the same why would only one have a gust comming from it?

    Katon: Doargon Nagareboshi|Fire Release: Draco Meteor|
    Rank:S
    Range:Mid-Long
    Chakra:40
    Damage:80
    Description:The user focuses his katon chakra into his mouth and then spews out a huge fire ball into the sky right above him at great speed and then just as it reaches a great height(5 m above) it splits into multiple fragments of fire and shoots out in all direction resembling a shower of meteor,none of fire fragments comes at the user who is standing right below.Upon contact with the anything(even ground) the fragments explode creating even more damage

    -can only be used 3 times per battle
    -must have mastery over fire
    -must be atleast sannin rank to use this jutsu
    -cannot use an fire jutsu of S-rank in the next turn

    i'll submit my new sword next week and change its abilities completely

    Declined. I feel like something like this needs handseals to make and a handseal to split into multiple peices.
     
         
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