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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    Its been a complete week and few hours since my last Submission

    Resubmitting, with restriction

    (Fuuton: Zennou Clap) - Wind Stye: Almighty Clap
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user spread his arms and then clap with all his power in the direction of target. The huge amount of wind blows with wind blades in that direction, making the opponent flow with it by giving him the injury due to wind blades and/or repelling any fire style jutsu upto A-rank with double the speed and effect, as it has affinity and polarity towards fire.
    Note: ~Cannot use any wind technique in same turn.
    ~Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ What didn't you understand when I said "lower the abilities"? Adding restrictions doesn't change the fact that this technique is OP.
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    Summoning Animal: Terrapin
    Scroll Owner: Enzup
    Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
    Summoning Boss if existing:N/A
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A

    ~Approved~
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    (Hulk Mo-Do) - Hulk Mode
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User passes his chakra to each cell of his body and expands the size of cells and thus user's body also gets expanded by almost double size. So that he looks like a monstor and his power and physical strength becomes 10 times then a normal shinobi. And after that he passes doton chakra to make his body even harder than diamond and because of physical strength and hardness he does not have any effect of earth techniques.
    While in this mode he can take instant jumps upto 30m height and moves to any range and when landing from sky, he can destroy everything on earth's surface by punching it, within its range. His speed increases tremendously which is comparable to the raikage's speed while lightning armour activated. In this mode user can't use any of the basic 5 elements except earth and lightning (hardness and speed). He gives double damage points to any taijustu move and 50% more to other moves, and receives 50% less damage to any jutsu and does not have any effect of jutsus upto C-Rank due to the toughness, power, physical strength and hardness.
    Note: ~Can only be used once per battle and lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Biggest demerit of this mode is that after entering in this mode, user can't use basic 5 elements except earth and lightning.
    ~After this mode is over each and every cell of user's body starts paining him very hard for next 2 turns.
    ~User gets exhausted and fatigue due to which his speed decreases by 2 levels.
    ~User can't use any jutsu above B-Rank for next 2 turns.
    ~User gives 20 less damage points and receives 20 more damage points and requires 20 more chakra points, for any jutsu.
    Just try imagining him in skin color, instead of green color.




    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Just no.
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    Resubmitting, in a complete different manner

    (Buki: Yoshimitsu's Dyuaru Heika) - Weapon: Yoshimitsu's Dual Swords
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: These are the two swords i.e. green and crimson red, which were wielded by yoshimitsu and then passed down to Enzup. It is believed that they were the swords of the lightning God (green) and fire god (crimson red) which are sharper than laser. These both swords are flexible, and no-one can even touch these swords without user's will and if someone tries to do so then it will give shock(green sword) or will burn(crimson red sword) that person's hand. So, that person can't hold it anymore.

    Not much is known about the crimson sword till now.

    The Green Sword has its affinity towards lightning and can use upto A-rank lightning. And also the Sword can protect the user from any lightning jutsu as the user will intake the lightning jutsu of the opponent in his sword and will pass that lightning to the ground by stabbing the ground with his sword, or that lightning can be used in combo with combining it with other element like water, but that jutsu (which has to be combined with the opponent's lightning) has to be used instantly after intaking the opponent's lightning.

    The user can spin any sword very fast in clockwise direction, then user can fly by facing the sword in upward direction, just like helicopter's blades.
    Note: ~User can block any lightning jutsu by passing it in ground. User can do this to all lightning jutsu because he is not absorbing it, he is just simply passing it underground.
    ~Can be put in bio, or if summoned then lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Can only be summoned 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.




    ~Declined~ Sharper then lasers, flexible swords, protecting the user from any lightning, all those makes it unacceptable. Take out the part where you can absorb lightning, many swords can already do that so yours is a rip off.
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    Resubmitting, removed the activation part

    (Ninjustu: Chakra Akuma) - Chakra Demon
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 (if got hit by sword or claw)
    Description: The user releases his pure chakra from the whole body and shapes it in the form of a creature by using shape manipulation that surrounds and protects the user as it can act on his own. The chakra manipulated demon always remains with the user. The chakra demon has a sword in his right hand and chakra claw in his left hand, which can be used to attack or defend. This chakra demon has a total of 200 health, so in order to destroy it, one must give him 200 damage points, and also chakra demon can cut through some earth techniques using his sword and block some by using claw.
    Note:~Does not have any effect of ninjutsu.
    ~Can't use any ninjutsu while chakra demon is on battlefield.
    ~Lasts untill destroyed.
    ~As the moment the chakra demon is destroyed, user gets exhausted and fatigue due to which his speed decreases by 1 level for next 2 turns.
    ~20 More chakra will be required to perform any jutsu for next 2 turns.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    Its just the simple shape manipulation of pure chakra.
    Look of Chakra manipulated demon



    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Anything even slightly related to Susanoo will be instantly declined.


    This week's cjs

    Resubmitting, removed the part- with double speed and effect

    (Fuuton: Zennou Clap) - Wind Stye: Almighty Clap
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user spread his arms and then clap with all his power in the direction of target. The huge amount of wind blows with wind blades in that direction, making the opponent flow with it by giving him the injury due to wind blades.
    ~Can only be used twice per match.
    ~Can't use S-rank and higher wind jutsus the following turn.

    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    Edit my first Note if necessary..

    ~Declined~
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    Resubmitting, removed the absorbing part and passing it underground.

    (Buki: Yoshimitsu's Dyuaru Heika) - Weapon: Yoshimitsu's Dual Swords
    Type: Offense/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: These are the two swords i.e. green and crimson red, which were wielded by yoshimitsu and then passed down to Enzup. It is believed that they were the swords of the lightning God (green) and fire god (crimson red). No-one can even touch these swords without user's will and if someone tries to do so then it will give major shock(green sword) or will burn completely(crimson red sword) that person's hand. So, that person can't hold it anymore.

    Not much is known about the crimson sword till now.

    The Green Sword has its affinity towards lightning and can use upto A-rank lightning. And also the Sword is capable of intaking any lightning jutsu of the opponent in the sword and after that, that lightning can be used to attack the opponent or can be used in combo with combining it with other elements like water, but that jutsu (which has to be combined with the opponent's lightning) has to be used instantly after intaking the opponent's lightning.

    The user can spin any sword very fast in clockwise direction, then user can fly by facing the sword in upward direction, just like helicopter's blades.
    Note: ~User can fly only 4 times per battle and can't use that hand for performing the handseals.
    ~Can be put in bio, or if summoned then lasts for 4 turns.
    ~Can only be summoned 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    Side Note: If you have played the game taken 3 with/aginst Yoshimitsu, then you must have watched his flying technique using his sword.



    ~Declined~ You didn't listen to what I said; take out the part about it absorbing lightning. Also, take out/change the bold part, I can allow that. Next time I'll decline it for good if you don't make the appropriate changes.

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    (Chaini-zu Gunjiteki gigei: Kuchiake) - Chinese Martial Arts: Activate
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: D
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 10
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User calms his body down and concentrates on his skill accomplished by hard works, and on his inner energy and on his training about martial arts and after that he is able to use kung fu, wushu and qigong or any techniques which are related to Chinese Martial Arts.
    Note: ~Must use once in every battle before using techniques of Chinese Martial Arts.

    Side Note: I already asked Izuna Uchiha to submit cjs about Chinese Martial Arts in pm.

    ~Approved~
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 11-16-2011 at 01:35 PM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Ninjutsu: Joubu Henka) - Solid Change
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User touches any solid and takes its properties and becomes like that solid.
    Note: -For eg. if user touches steel, then he will take steel properties and his body will become like steel.
    -User can come to normal be making a single handseal.
    -Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ Unacceptable.

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    (Doton: Supi-di Mo-ta-baiku) - Earth Style: Speedy Bike
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short (when created)
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates a special bike made up of hard earth, which have 2 silencers each beside the tyre and 2 fans each at the end of silencer. This special bike start soaking user's chakra and passes it to the silencer and then to the fans, so that bike starts moving at high speed such that it can even be rided on the verticle walls, and user can control it anyhow.
    Note: -It is a normal bike in driving and controlling.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle and lasts untill destroyed.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.


    ~Declined~ Try to keep it within the boundaries of the Narutoverse. As far as I know, there's no motorcycle, and especially not the ones from Tron.

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    (Doton: Supi-di Kuruma) - Earth Style: Speedy Car
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: C
    Range: Short (when created)
    Chakra Cost: 15
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates a special convertible car made up of hard earth which have 2 silencers, and 2 fans each at the end of silencer. This special car start soaking user's chakra and passes it to the silencer and then to the fans, so that car starts moving at high speed, and user can control it anyhow.
    Note: -It is a normal car in driving and controlling.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle and lasts untill destroyed.
    -Can only be taught by Enzup.


    ~Declined~ Same as above.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 11-15-2011 at 03:13 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Suiton : Yusaburu bakufu heki) - Water Style : Rocky Waterfall Burst
    Type : Attack
    Rank : S
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra Cost : 40
    Damage Points : 80
    Description : After performing a total of 2 handseals, the user will slam both hands onto the floor thus causing a huge burst of water just like how a waterfall would shoot up. The water comes from underground if the terrain allows it. It will take a few seconds after the slamming of the user's hand upon the ground for the water to fully come spurting out. As the water spurts out from the ground, rock debris would also come bursting out along with the water, smashing and bruising the opponent roughly. If the user and the enemy are already on a water source, the user does not need to slam his hands on the ground but make an extra handseal, and a waterfall comes bursting up upon the enemy without the rock debris but there is no time delay.
    • Can only be used thrice per battle
    • Can only be taught/used by -Yusuke-
    • Takes a few second till the water comes spurting out
    • No S-rank water techniques up until the end of the next turn
    • If used in short-range, user might get hit by rock debris falling from the sky
    • Requires an extra handseal if performed on water but no need to slam hands onto the ground


    ~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist. I believe it's Roku who's got a Geyser technique, which is basically a copy of your technique (and vice-versa).

    (Bijuu : Awaikonsutorakuto) - Demon Style : Ethereal Reconstruction
    Rank : S
    Type : Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : N/A
    Description : The user taps into his demonic chakra, utilizing it into his sand along with more of the user's own chakra. With this, the user is able of giving his sand a tinch of reconstruction within itself. The Bijuu chakra would start manifesting within the sand with the user's own chakra to supervising it and telling it what to do, somewhat, controlling it from going out of control too. Due to this, the sand's weight will turn lighter than it normally is but does not have its strength reduce as the demonic chakra hardens the outer layer but messes up the inner part. The user is now able to easily manipulate his own sand, making it quicker but more vulnerable to lightning as one hit is able to break the shell, rendering the sand useless. (outer layer)

    Note : Once per battle
    Note : Lasts for whole battle
    Note : Takes a turn to fully activate
    Note : Can only be used by Gaara with the Shukaku
    Note : Must be Kage rank as to control the Bijuu chakra
    Note : There is no way of deactivating it once it has been used
    Note : For the whole battle, it is extremely vulnerable to lightning's piercing effect
    Note : In return, the user is now able to easily manipulate the sand along with it being faster

    ~Pending~ I have nothing against this technique, but we don't allow free manipulation of element anymore. Unless your bio is already an element bender, no CJ will be accepted to give you that ability. I will accept it if you already have the ability to freely manipulate the sand or if you want to edit that part out and just make your sand stronger to general attacks and weaker to lightning.

    (Suna : Hikitorinin) - Sand Style : Gaara's Caretaker
    Rank : S
    Type : Offensive / Defensive / Supplementary
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : Much of the ultimate version of, 'Sand Style Technique', this technique can be used both for attacking and defending the user. Gaara pictures his mother from the images he has been shown by Yashamaru, Kakura's brother. In this technique, Gaara's sand takes the form of Gaara's mother from the chest up. The manifestation is much bigger than the size of a human and can even block up to a total of thiry ninjas behind its back. This technique is great for mass attack, defence or causing a distraction. This technique is not as versatile as any other basic elemental creation technique as it is only able to take the form of Gaara's pictured mother but is capable of extending its arms or any part of his body which are made of sand just like how Gaara's Sand Clone technique does as well.

    Note : Can only be used by a Gaara biography
    Note : Can only be used four times per battle
    Note : Able of regenerating with nearby sand source
    Note : Is not as versatile as basic elemental creation techniques
    Note : No other sand techniques can then be activated as long as this technique is active

    ~Declined~ How many times have said this: NO CANNON TECHNIQUES WILL BE ACCEPTED. Submitting those is against the rule and next time I see one it's an automatic ban from the thread.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 11-15-2011 at 03:19 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Fuuton: Naibun Hishou Waza) - Wind Style: Secret Flying Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user releases wind from each spore of his body in downward direction, which results in a huge opposite force, so that his body get lifts and rises from earth's surface and enables the user to fly, at any height the user wants.
    Note: ~User has to continuously release the wind to continue flying.
    ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.

    Declined. This custom already exists
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    (Raiton: Hisan Ikkakujuu) - Lightning Release: Flying Unicorn
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a flying unicorn from his lightning chakra by, which can use lightning jutsus upto B-Rank from his horn. While running on ground he is very fast just like horse and while flying in sky he is just fast as bird. But when running in sky while flying, his speed gets increased.
    User can sit on the unicorn as rider.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.



    Declined. add a restriction stating that it counts as a move when the unicorn uses a technique
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    (Fuuton: Hisan Ikkakujuu) - Wind Style: Flying Unicorn
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a flying unicorn from his wind chakra by compressing wind chakra, which is very stable and can use wind jutsus upto B-Rank from his horn. While running on ground he is very fast just like horse and while flying in sky he is just fast as bird. But when running in sky while flying, his speed gets increased.
    Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.


    Declined. add a restriction stating that it counts as a move when the unicorn uses a technique
    This week's cj

    resubmitting
    Added the part which you told me to add (bold part)

    (Raiton: Hisan Ikkakujuu) - Lightning Release: Flying Unicorn
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a flying unicorn from his lightning chakra by, which can use lightning jutsus upto B-Rank from his horn. While running on ground he is very fast just like horse and while flying in sky he is just fast as bird. But when running in sky while flying, his speed gets increased.
    User can sit on the unicorn as rider.
    Note: ~If unicorn uses a technique then it would be counted as one of the 3 moves.
    ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.



    ~Declined~ This is not a summon, it's a jutsu. I won't allow you to create any mythological creature you want and give it the same properties as a summon while not classifying it as one.

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    resubmitting
    Added the part which you told me to add (bold part)

    (Fuuton: Hisan Ikkakujuu) - Wind Style: Flying Unicorn
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a flying unicorn from his wind chakra by compressing wind chakra, which is very stable and can use wind jutsus upto B-Rank from his horn. While running on ground he is very fast just like horse and while flying in sky he is just fast as bird. But when running in sky while flying, his speed gets increased.
    Note: ~If unicorn uses a technique then it would be counted as one of the 3 moves.
    ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.



    ~Declined~ This is not a summon, it's a jutsu. I won't allow you to create any mythological creature you want and give it the same properties as a summon while not classifying it as one.

    New cj

    (Katon: Hisan Ikkakujuu) - Fire Release: Flying Unicorn
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 25 (+15 for every turn)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user creates a flying unicorn from his fire chakra by, which can use fire jutsus upto B-Rank from his horn. While running on ground he is very fast just like horse and while flying in sky he is just fast as bird. But when running in sky while flying, his speed gets increased.
    User can sit on the unicorn as rider.
    Note: ~If unicorn uses a technique then it would be counted as one of the 3 moves.
    ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.


    ~Declined~ This is not a summon, it's a jutsu. I won't allow you to create any mythological creature you want and give it the same properties as a summon while not classifying it as one.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 11-15-2011 at 03:22 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Raiton: gojou buza ) Lightning Style: Joy buzzer
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60(+15 if used with jyuuken or taijutsu)
    Description: The user focuses their raiton chakra to create a static field surrounding their hands. The static field is really shocking and if the user puts his hands near each other (palms facing each other) raw lightning crackles between them. When the user hits a body part, it leaves a nasty burn and can cause that body part to be numb for a little bit since its raw electricity that enters they body upon contact.
    Note:This jutsu lasts for 4 turns
    note: due to static field, the user cant use any raiton jutsus involving handseals while its activated
    note: can only be taught by Roger23
    note: the static field is visible and can give the user away
    note: can only be used 2 times
    note: user cant use any raiton tech past A-rank for 2 turns after the jutsu has worn off

    ~Declined~ Take out the part where it last for 4 turn. Make it a 1 move technique.
     
         
    Last edited by Izuna Uchiha; 11-15-2011 at 03:24 AM.

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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Note: I'd like to point out that I CoCreated this jutsu and what Im about to submit will have some simularities:

    12.)(Hyouton: Shimo Hitonomi Gekido ) Ice Release: Frost Bite Rage
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:S
    Range:Self
    Chakra Points:50
    Damage Points:N/A (+15 damage points to Ice techs and +10 damage points to taijutsu)
    Description: The user will release a large amount of water and wind chakra around him gathering all the moisture in the air of a 10 meter radios and cover himself in it. This will look like the user skin tone is becoming lighter til it becomes pure Bluish-white, which in turn raises his/her defense due to be covered in ice(Basically able to block shurikens and kunais without special properties). In this form all Ice techs released from the user are 10 damage points stronger and when he touch something, it causes a minor case of frost bite, making taijutsu more effective. the user is also able to make ice jutsu with one hand seal.the user can not nbe harmed by fire of c rank or below as the ice around him would keep him cold and not inurjied.
    Notes:
    -Can only be used once
    -Last 3 turns
    -No more ice abilities for the rest of the battle.
    -can only use ice jutsu and taijutsu while in this mode.
    -must be of the yuki clan
    Hyouton: Hisame Genkotsu( Ice Style: Hail Fists)
    Type:Supplementary|Attack
    Rank:A
    Range:Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user will make 2 hand seals and focus his chakra into already falling hail. The user will use chakra and shape manipulation to form the hail into multiple fist made of reinforced ice (due to chakra) making it rain ice fists capable of pulverising the opponents.
    Notes:
    -Can only be used by haku yuki and Taiketsu Yagami
    -Technique only lasts a few seconds as its only one wave of ice fists. After that, it resumes hailing
    -Usable 3 times

    ~Approved~

    Hyouton: Aisu Kobushi( Ice Release: Ice Fist)
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60 (40 if only hit by the burst of ice [Mid])
    Description: the user will make the tiger,dog, and boar hand seals and focus all his water and wind chakra into his hand. he will then make a fist and relase the chakra. The chakra will form around his fist in the shape of very dense ice. When the user punches something, he will release that ice in a unfocused burst of ice with a impact so powerful, it can be compared to that of Tsunade's punches. A hit with this ice fist won't only send the enemy flying it will also freeze that area of impact for 30 seconds on contact potentially harming the opponent even more if struck in a vital spot...
    note: Unfocused burst can travel to mid-range
    note: can only be used by haku yuki and taiketsu yagami
    note: Usable 3 times in battle

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Hyouton: Shimo Hitonomi Gekido V2) Ice Release: Frost Bite Rage V2
    Rank:S
    Type:Attack|Defend|Supplementary
    Range:Short
    Chakra:40
    Damage: (+5 to water, wind, and Ice Release)
    Description: Similar to the origianal Frost Bite Rage, the user will gather all the air and water in a 10 meter radious and then channel chakra into it while covering himself in it. With the new version, the user will develope a shroud making him look like an icy ghost straight out of a myth or legend. His eyes will give off a blue hue and his body will be a pure bluish white. In this form, the user's water and wind techniques will all gain a boost in strength as all the user's techniques will take on icy properties making them more devestating (Water become almost freezing temperatures and wind becomes fridged wind like with freezing temperatures) and Ice will become even stronger in the aspects of coldness, dexterity, and speed. While in this mode all ice techniques can be created faster being able to create ice in little to no time. Also, due to his/her ghostly like shroud, they can extend limbs to reach farther targets and are able to bend them even where joints aren't since the shroad is made of ice.( Up to 5 meters away) Unlike frost bite rage, this technique doesn't have as many drawbacks due to only making ice faster, harder, and colder while incorporating ice into the two elements that make it and not making a powerful defense.
    Notes:
    -Usable twice in battle
    -Lasts 3 turns each
    -While active, the user can only use water, wind, and ice elemental ninjustu.
    -After deactivation the user must wait 5 turns before activating again and must wait two turns before using ice, water, or wind ninjutsu
    -After second deactivation, the user can't use water, wind, and ice ninjutsu for the rest of the battle
    -Must be from Yuki Clan
    -Can only be taught by Taiketsu Yagami


    ~Declined~ You stacked too many abilities on top of one another, take out the arms extension part since it's already been made with another element (many in fact). Make it once per match and 4 turns. Adjust the restrictions in consequences and make sure you define the speed enhancement your ice gets.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Type: Attack, Supplementary
    Rank: B Rank
    Range: Close-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user creates a fire around their fist and they run towards the user at high speeds punches the oppenent.
    Note: The fire will burn for two turns.
    Note: Only Sharingan Users can learn this
    Note: Can only be used once every four turns.

    ~Declined~ Next time, follow the proper template. This technique already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Oasis Nara View Post
    Resubmitting

    (Jiton: Satetsu o ikiru) - Magnetism Release: Living Iron Sand
    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The 3rd Kazekage puppet gather his massive iron sand into the sky then pour them down across the battle field like rain of iron sand spike which will impale the enemy, then iron sand will cover the entire battle field excluding sasori’s ground.

    Note : Take out the ability as you suggested

    ~Approved~

    New Submission.

    (Kage-me haiteku) - shadow eye tech
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary/Attack
    Range: Short-long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: After performing the rat hand seal, the user able to manipulate any shadow within his sight such as the opponent own shadow, trees, rocks, any solid object which has shadow then the user have the free usage using that shadow by extend the shadow towards the opponent and forming it like a rope of shadow to tie up and bind the opponent until they can’t move.

    ~Declined do not resubmit~

    Human Puppet bio submission

    Double G [Goku and Gogeta)
    Rank: S-Rank Puppet
    Name: Goku and Gogeta
    Link to bio: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=108740
    Link to the fight: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=110475

    Description: This puppet able to use 5 basic element, Rain release and normal Taijusu, Goku and Gogeta puppet is kept in a scroll that's stuck on Sasori's back, and he can be summoned by Sasori as Sasori wants to.
    ~Note: Can only be wielded by Sasori, and Sasori has to be owned by Oasis Nara

    ~Declined~ 5 elements plus a KG? No.
    Resubmitting

    Human Puppet bio submission

    Goku
    Rank: S-Rank Puppet
    Name: Goku
    Link to bio: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=108740
    Link to the fight: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=110475

    Description: This puppet able to use Rain release and normal Genjutsu and Ninjutsu Goku puppet is kept in a scroll that's stuck on Sasori's back, and he can be summoned by Sasori as Sasori wants to.
    ~Note: Can only be wielded by Sasori, and Sasori has to be owned by Oasis Nara

    Note : I Remove the 5 basic element and only 1 human puppet not 2 (I remove Gogeta)

    ~Approved~

    New Submission

    (Jiton: Ōkina shōgeki) – Magnetism Release: Great Impact
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid - Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The 3rd Kazekage release massive amount of iron sand then forming it into two huge wall of iron size of a mountain which will press from two opposing sides of the opponent like a press machine then will impact with tremendous force, smashing everything caught in between.

    Note :
    ~ Only usable twice
    ~ Can only be perform by sasori bio
    ~ No S-rank and higher Magnetic release technique the following turn.
    ~ Can only be taught by Oasis Nara

    ~Approved~ added a restriction.

    (Jiton: Tatsu Sora) – Magnetism Release: Falling Sky
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 90 (-40 to the user)
    Description: This jutsu is the ultimate 3rd Kazekage jutsu which have been develop by Sasori, The 3rd Kazekage goes to mid air then release a tremendous amount of iron sand into the sky which will cover the sky entirely above the battle field and seems like black dark cloud covering whole the sky, then the 3rd Kazekage form the iron sand into a tremendous size of iron cube which will falling down from the sky into the battle field, the iron cube itself size twice of the soccer field with range 200 Yard length and 100 yard width crushing anyone beneath the coverage of the iron cube falling are, which nearly unavoidable including Sasori’s ground but the 3rd Kazekage will soften the iron sand above Sasori’s ground so will never harm him, then the impact shall causing tremendous earth quake into 7.0 Richter Scale when hit the ground which could kill anyone near the impact source even to those who goes underground and Sasori himself will off balance and suffer major injury.

    Restriction :
    *Can only be used once per battle.
    *Causing extremely exhausted and major injury to Sasori also causing slow movement unable to dashing/running nor walking correctly
    * Will not be able to use the 3rd Kazekage puppet for the rest of the battle due to damaged after use.
    *Only C-Rank jutsu for the next 2 turn
    *Only B-Rank jutsu after the next 2 turn for the rest of the battle
    *The user takes damage -40
    *Only F-Rank Lightning can pierces the Iron cube
    *Can only be perform by Sasori bio
    *Can only be used by Oasis Nara and can’t be taught

    ~Declined~ OP.OP.OP. Where would you get all that iron sand anyway? If it's still that unreasonable next time you submit it I'll decline it for good. I'll leave the details of what to take out to you.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Since my last submission 10/25/11 so new week!

    (Zōo | baransu | sereniti ) Hatred|Balance|Serenity
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 35
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: One day, the user has set upon to travel mountains and rivers, until he found something more then he was looking for. This monk has said: “I believe that true focus lies somewhere between rage and serenity…” The warrior must learn to balance his desires, emotions, and abilities. After the warrior had misbeliefs, the monk finally showed the warrior his serenity, hidden inside his own brain, then serenity had finally came into balance with his anger, as the monk had shown him, his lost memories of his mother.
    As serenity represents water, and rage represents lightning, as using that principle the ninja could become faster at using those elements and need less handseals, and he could also gain a small boost to them, around +5.
    Note:
    -Can only taught by Dr. House
    -Can only be used once a battle
    -Lasts ti'll the battle is over and must be done in the beginning of battle.

    ~Declined~ Was that monk's name Charles Xavier by any chance ? Anyway, take out the +5 boost, and define the speed enhancement.

    (Suiton:Firutārenzu) Water Release: Filter Lenses
    Rank: C
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will basically channels his suiton chakra onto his eyes, creating a really thin surface, much like contact lenses ontop of the cornea, allowing the user to not to get blinded by an extreme/strong light.

    ~Declined~ While water does diffract the light, it still allows it through. And considering it's an extremely fine layer (a couple of millimeters at most) the effect is almost non-existent. I light the idea behind this, but you'll need to work on it some more.

    Quote Originally Posted by Dr. House View Post
    Sumitsukigasa - Dante's Horn of Sorrow
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short (Short-Mid if the imbued wind is extended)
    Chakra: 40 (-15 each turn)
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: It has yet been said within many dusty old books that a great man named Dante Alighieri has gone to save his loved one from the great evil toad of Myobokuzan, Gamafer. Dante had gone down into the pit of death, into Gamafer's lair. After 7 days of a bloody fight, Dante failed to save his flower, and he showed no mercy to Gamafer. After the bloodbath, Dante carved a blade from Gamafer's mighty horn and he took these pieces to be forged by Hephaestus, the nearby blacksmith. He had forged the mighty double-bladed sword, and named Sumitsukigasa. The double-bladed sword is made of mostly unbreakable bone, harder then steel. Because of the blade part is made of bone, and most of it's parts, the weapon weighs almost half of it's size, and can be handled in order to reach high speeds. The -15 chakra in each turn is because Sumitsukigasa sucks the user's chakra in order to maintain it's ability, which is being always in the state of having itself imbued with wind chakra, quite similar to (Fūton: Kaze Kyōka no Tsūru) - Wind Release: Wind Enhanced Tools, and it won't stop until the double-bladed sword is out of short range from the user. If the user wishes, he may channel more of his chakra into the sword, which is an additional -20 chakra in each usage, in order to extend the pre-existing wind chakra inbued within the sword, from short range onto mid range. As the wind chakra has been extended on the sword in order to reach onto mid-range, the wind shaped like blade becomes an S-ranked, but for only that turn.
    Note:
    -5+ to every wind attack.
    -Because of the sword's abilities, only a Sannin may hold the sword.
    -Because of it's wind affinities, only who mastered wind may use it.
    -The blade will only reach onto mid range, if the wind chakra imbued within the sword has been extended so that it will reach onto mid-range.
    -Only may Dr. House use this, and who he allows.



    ~Declined~ I think I made it clear I would't accept weapons that extend further then mid-range (was it you who submitted a scythe that could extent 50ft or something?) . Anyway, the point is, keep it short range. You do realize you can make it extend 5-6 ft and still be in short range?
    Re-submitting.

    Sumitsukigasa - Dante's Horn of Sorrow
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra: 40 (-15 each turn)
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: It has yet been said within many dusty old books that a great man named Dante Alighieri has gone to save his loved one from the great evil toad of Myobokuzan, Gamafer. Dante had gone down into the pit of death, into Gamafer's lair. After 7 days of a bloody fight, Dante failed to save his flower, and he showed no mercy to Gamafer. After the bloodbath, Dante carved a blade from Gamafer's mighty horn and he took these pieces to be forged by Hephaestus, the nearby blacksmith. He had forged the mighty double-bladed sword, and named Sumitsukigasa. The double-bladed sword is made of mostly unbreakable bone, harder then steel. Because of the blade part is made of bone, and most of it's parts, the weapon weighs almost half of it's size, and can be handled in order to reach high speeds. The -15 chakra in each turn is because Sumitsukigasa sucks the user's chakra in order to maintain it's ability, which is being always in the state of having itself imbued with wind chakra, quite similar to (Fūton: Kaze Kyōka no Tsūru) - Wind Release: Wind Enhanced Tools, and it won't stop until the double-bladed sword is out of short range from the user. If the user wishes, he may channel more of his chakra into the sword, which is an additional -10 chakra in each usage, in order to extend the pre-existing wind chakra inbued within the sword, onto 5-6ft. As the wind chakra has been extended on the sword in order to reach 5-6ft, the blade becomes an S-ranked wind blade, but for only that turn.
    Note:
    5+ to every wind attack.
    -Because of the sword's abilities, only a Sannin may hold the sword.
    -Because of it's wind affinities, only who mastered wind may use it.
    -If user wishes, the wind chakra imbued within the sword can be extended so that it will reach onto 5-6ft.
    -Only may Dr. House use this, and who he allows.
    -If someone tries to hold it, the sword will start sucking most of his chakra out of him, leaving him with a feeling of drained.



    Note:
    -I took out the Mid range part, and I added the 5-6ft, so leaves it with short range, as you have suggested,
    -I have added 15+ to every wind attack, because the weapon had an affinity of wind, and it boosts the user's wind attacks.
    -I have also added "if enemy holds it"



    -Feel free to edit, if you see something wrong.

    ~Approved~ Made it +5 again.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    -Earth Style: Earth Shield (Doton: Tsuchi Toku)
    Rank: B
    Type: Defensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra cost:15
    Damage points:30
    Description: The user simply does hand seals pertaining to the element and raises up a wide wall made of earth as a shield to protect against attacks and techniques
    Note: Can be used Four times in battle
    Note: Must wait 3 turns to use again


    Wind Style: Racing Bullets (Fuuton: Re-su Dangan)
    Rank: B
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Mid
    Chakra cost:15
    Damage points:30
    Description: The user builds up chakra and concentrates on shape manipulation while on it and releasing it in a form of racing sharp needle like bullet which when comes in contact with the opponent causes serious injury. it can also be used as a defense measure to blow or protect against light or little weight attack.
    Note:Can Be Used 2 Times In Battle
    Rank :Note:The user Must Wait 2 Turns To use again

    ~Both Declined~ Similar techniques already exists.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Typhon View Post
    (Ame unsou no Jutsu) Rain Transportation Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user focuses water chakra throughout their body and breaks down into rain drops. The rain drops then quickly shoot up into the clouds above where the user is free to move throughout the clouds. They then rain down in the desired location where they reform their body. This happens fairly fast, but is nowhere near instantaneous. It takes several seconds to move from one location to the other being logically longer depending on the distance travelling. While preforming this technique the user is susceptible to being scattered, blown away or evaporated. They can't preform any techniques until they reform and must reform in the same turn the technique is used.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Cannot use any other techniques before reforming.
    -Must reform during the same turn.
    -Rain clouds must be present.

    Declined. you mention that it takes tome for you to travel from one location to another, but not how long it takes to break apart, go into the sky, come back down, and reform into a human form. Also, what happens if you do happen to get scattered or evaporated?

    (Ame tou Shinigami) | Rain Sickle Death God
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user preforms two hand seals and then swings the sickle end of their kusarigama towards the target. As the blade travels it becomes coated rain drops that form into a massive sickle made of rain. The sickle is incredibly sharp and capable of slicing through A rank or below earth.
    -No other rain techniques that turn.
    -Requires an active rain storm.
    -Can only be used twice.

    Declined. It appears that you are still holding the chain of the kusarigama since you said you "swing it" and not "throw it", so there is no way that weapon could reach long range. it would be extremely combersome to fight with all that chain around you. typical chains are way less than 5 meters in length which is short range. Also rain is composed of water which is weak to earth so, yes, it could slice through A ranked earth, but the technique would be disrupted in the process, which should be noted.


    (Epikku sono Gilgamesh) | Epic of Gilgamesh
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: 100 (-20 to user)
    Description: This technique is one of the most feared rain techniques ever created and has become the inspiration for numerous flood myths throughout history. The user chains together a string of hand seals while releasing a massive amount of water chakra throughout the ground and into rain clouds. The rainstorm quickly becomes a monsoon as the earth throughout the battlefield begins to crack and release water. The down pour of rain rapidly combines with the water leaking from the earth and forms into a rampaging flood that washes over the battlefield in front of the user. The raging torrent is large enough and powerful enough to turn an entire village into a barren field of mud leaving nothing in its wake. The user is the epicenter of the technique with the flood expanding outward from their location reaching long range in each direction.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Requires an active rainstorm.
    -No Rain or Water techniques for the next three turns.
    -No Forbidden techniques for the next two turns.
    -No S ranked techniques the next turn.
    -User suffers twenty damage.

    Declined. Forbidden ranked techniqes need to have some sort of drawback which is what makes it forbidden. we both know "20 damage" means nothing when it comes to a fight.

    (Ame unsou no Jutsu) Rain Transportation Technique
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user focuses water chakra throughout their body and breaks down into rain drops. The rain drops then quickly shoot up into the clouds above where the user is free to move throughout the clouds. They then rain down in the desired location where they reform their body. This happens fairly fast, but is nowhere near instantaneous. The break down of the user's body is quick taking just a second, similar to someone user the water substitution technique. It then takes a couple of seconds to ascend into the clouds where it takes several seconds to move from one location to the other, being logically longer depending on the distance travelling. Finally it takes another couple of seconds to rain down in the desired location and reform. While preforming this technique the user is susceptible to being scattered, blown away or evaporated. If scattered while in rain drop form it will take the entirety of the user's turn to reform their body (even if using this technique as the user's last move, the amount of time to reform stays the same if scattered, independent of who's turn it is after the technique is used). Being evaporated results in the death of the user. They can't preform any techniques until they reform and must reform in the same turn the technique is used.
    -Can only be used twice per battle.
    -Cannot use any other techniques before reforming.
    -Must reform during the same turn.
    -Rain clouds must be present.

    Clarified the length it takes to use and the effects of being scattered or evaporated.

    ~Approved~ I changed the part where you can perform one last technique even if your scattered. So, it would take you a full turn to reform. Check the bold part.

    (Ame tou Shinigami) | Rain Sickle Death God
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: The user preforms two hand seals and then swings the sickle end of their kusarigama towards the target. As the blade travels it becomes coated rain drops that form into a massive sickle made of rain. The sickle is incredibly sharp and capable of slicing through A rank or below earth, though the rain will also be cancelled in the process. While the normal range of the sickle would be short, the size of the rain sickle extends the attack to mid.
    -No other rain techniques that turn.
    -Requires an active rain storm.
    -Can only be used twice.


    Reduced the range to mid and added the bit about the rain being destroyed when it cuts through A rank earth.

    ~Declined~ No sword/hammer/scythe (close combat weapons) that reach up to mid-range will be approved while still in the hand of the user (throwing it is the exception).

    (Epikku sono Gilgamesh) | Epic of Gilgamesh
    Type: Attack
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage: 100 (-20 to user)
    Description: This technique is one of the most feared rain techniques ever created and has become the inspiration for numerous flood myths throughout history. The user chains together a string of hand seals while releasing a massive amount of water chakra throughout the ground and into rain clouds. The rainstorm quickly becomes a monsoon as the earth throughout the battlefield begins to crack and release water. The down pour of rain rapidly combines with the water leaking from the earth and forms into a rampaging flood that washes over the battlefield in front of the user. The raging torrent is large enough and powerful enough to turn an entire village into a barren field of mud leaving nothing in its wake. The user can determine the direction of the flood choosing to make it unidirectional or make themselves the epicenter of the technique with the flood expanding outward from their location reaching long range in each direction. The amount of strain the technique causes on the body is immense causing the user to become physically exhausted. As a result they'll be limited in the techniques they can use and a restricted to a slow walk for movement.
    -Can only be used once.
    -Requires an active rainstorm.
    -No Rain or Water techniques for the next three turns.
    -No Forbidden techniques for the next two turns.
    -No S ranked techniques the next turn.
    -User suffers twenty damage.
    -Any active rainstorm dissipates after used.
    -User is restricted to a slow walk after usage and is constantly out of breath for three turns.


    Really trying to avoid putting in some restriction that's going to make me auto-lose if this attack misses.

    ~Approved~ Good one. I added a little something at the end of your last restriction.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    This week's CJ-

    (Suna Hando) - Sand Hands
    Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User makes 2 hands made of sand of almost 3 times the user in length around himself, which user can control and can be used to punch with extreme strength, which can easily break through giant rocks and crushes most of the bones of a human's body if gets hit.
    Note: -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Proteus.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

    (Suna Kaibutsu) - Sand Monster
    Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User creates a sand monster of slightly greater than the user's size who have sword and shield in his hands and reforms after destroying.
    Note: -Can only be reformed only if he has been sliced or cut into halves or etc.., but cannot reform if he has been melt or some part of it has been blowed somewhere else.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Proteus.

    ~Declined~ OP. This isn't well restricted for an A-rank technique and it's ability to reform needs to be kept in check. Make it so that you can only perform 2 techniques per turn if you want to keep the monster's ability to reform, and that you can perform 3 techniques per turn if your monster doesn't have any ability to reform (the idea is to keep infusing chakra in it to keep reforming it, hence cutting one of your turns).

    (Suna Wana) - Sand Trap
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: User creates 2 hollow hemispheres around the target and by making a single handseal both hemisphere comes closer to each other instantly and thus making a complete sphere and trapping the opponent insde it.
    Note: -Till the time user will continue his handseal the sphere will be reformed after destroying, only way to escape is to destroy it completely.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taught by Proteus.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by black uchiha View Post
    Please Edit If Needed

    (Ningyō no moji retsu: Kyōsōkyoku dai 5-i) Puppet Strings: Concerto #5
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 (+10 on any hearing enhanced opponents)
    Description: The user begins to pluck/play his puppet strings (strings can be made with this jutsu or can use existing strings) making the strings produces a loud music/sound that hurts the opponent(s) ears to the point that they bleed. This also causes the opponent(s) to become dizzy and their vision to become blurred from the dizziness. This is done due to the stress on the inner ear which houses your vestibular system that controls balance. The opponent feels different effects/levels of dizziness (Disequilibrium, Vertigo, & Presyncope) depending on how close/far the opponent(s) are from the source of the sound. Happens as follows: Disequilibrium (long-range), Vertigo (mid-range), Presyncope (short-range)

    Disequilibrium- the opponent(s) feel the sensation of being off balance, and falls in a specific direction (stated by the user).

    Vertigo- the opponent(s) feels the sensation of spinning or having one's surroundings spin about them, making aiming at the user impossible due to the spinning

    Presyncope- the opponent(s) feel lightheadedness, muscular weakness and feel faint, this makes the opponent faint and/or become paralyzed due to the muscular weakness.

    -Can only use 3 times per battle
    -No S-rank puppet techs in the same turn (doesn’t include the S-rank puppets)
    -No S-rank puppet techs in the next turn (doesn’t include the S-rank puppets)
    -Effects last 2 turns
    -Effects last 1 extra turn on any hearing enhanced opponent(s)
    -Only 1 hand needed to perform (can be used on strings connected to puppets)
    - Can only be taught by Black Uchiha


    Info on dizziness http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dizziness


    (Kadata sutoringusu) Kadata Strings
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: short-long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: This technique takes basic puppet strings and basic element infusion and puts them together. The user (without handseals) puts three times the amount of chakra needed to make normal chakra strings and infuse them with elemental chakra to make them stronger. These strings can be used to attach themselves to puppets and other objects under the user's control that are capable of moving of their own accord (weapons/like chiyo did with the kunai). The object/puppet gains that elemental affinity of the chakra string they are attached with. Each element gives the strings different abilities. The srings can be manipulated however the user sees fit.

    Water: gives them erosive property (not acid, more like water erosion)

    Wind: gives them more cutting property

    Lightning: gives them a paralyzing affect (2 turns if touched) and cutting (if stabbed)

    Fire: gives them a burning property

    Earth: makes them stronger (harder to break)

    -Elemental Affinities include basic 5/CE that the user owns
    -Natural Elemental Weaknesses still apply.
    -User can control up to two Elemental Affinity Chakra Strings at once (one per hand)
    -User cannot use Forbidden Ranked Techniques of the Elemental affinity chakra strings that they are using.
    -User is limited to a total of three Elemental Chakra String Affinities per battle.
    -Can only use 4 times per battle.
    -Can only be used by Puppet Users.
    - Stays in effect for two turns
    - Can only be used every other turn (after the two turn limit)
    - Lighting paralyzing last two turns.
    -Can be used on existing strings
    - Can control puppets while in effect
    - Can only be taught be Black Uchiha

    Please Edit If Needed


    ~All Declined~ Similar Techniques Exist, and the last jutsu is slightly overpowered and has a cumulative usage time of 8 turns. Too much.
    Resubmits

    After going through the entire cj thread and every zero listed I can't find any similarities in my Concerto #5, in the techs that it was said to be like.

    Here are the links to some sound techs in question

    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...t=57129&page=3

    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=12643


    (Ningyō no moji retsu: Kyōsōkyoku dai 5-i) Puppet Strings: Concerto #5
    Type: Attack/Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 (+10 on any hearing enhanced opponents)
    Description: The user begins to pluck/play his puppet strings (strings can be made with this jutsu or can use existing strings) making the strings produces a loud music/sound that hurts the opponent(s) ears to the point that they bleed. This also causes the opponent(s) to become dizzy and their vision to become blurred from the dizziness. This is done due to the stress on the inner ear which houses your vestibular system that controls balance. The opponent feels different effects/levels of dizziness (Disequilibrium, Vertigo, & Presyncope) depending on how close/far the opponent(s) are from the source of the sound. Happens as follows: Disequilibrium (long-range), Vertigo (mid-range), Presyncope (short-range)

    Disequilibrium- the opponent(s) feel the sensation of being off balance, and falls in a specific direction (stated by the user).

    Vertigo- the opponent(s) feels the sensation of spinning or having one's surroundings spin about them, making aiming at the user impossible due to the spinning

    Presyncope- the opponent(s) feel lightheadedness, muscular weakness and feel faint, this makes the opponent faint and/or become paralyzed due to the muscular weakness.

    -Can only use 3 times per battle
    -No S-rank puppet techs in the same turn (doesn’t include the S-rank puppets)
    -No S-rank puppet techs in the next turn (doesn’t include the S-rank puppets)
    -Effects last 2 turns
    -Effects last 1 extra turn on any hearing enhanced opponent(s)
    -Only 1 hand needed to perform (can be used on strings connected to puppets)
    - Can only be taught by Black Uchiha


    Info on dizziness http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dizziness


    (Kadata sutoringusu) Kadata Strings
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: short-long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description: This technique takes basic puppet strings and basic element infusion and puts them together. The user (without handseals) puts twice the amount of chakra needed to make normal chakra strings and infuse them with elemental chakra to make them stronger. These strings can be used to attach themselves to puppets and other objects under the user's control that are capable of moving of their own accord (weapons/like chiyo did with the kunai). The object/puppet gains that elemental affinity of the chakra string they are attached with. Each element gives the strings different abilities. The srings can be manipulated however the user sees fit.

    Water: gives them erosive property (not acid, more like water erosion)

    Wind: gives them more cutting property

    Lightning: gives them a paralyzing affect (2 turns if touched) and cutting (if stabbed)

    Fire: gives them a burning property

    Earth: makes them stronger (harder to break)

    -Elemental Affinities include basic 5/CE that the user owns
    -Natural Elemental Weaknesses still apply.
    -User can control 1 Elemental Affinity Chakra Strings at once (both hands)
    -User cannot use Forbidden Ranked Techniques of the Elemental affinity chakra strings that they are using.
    -User is limited to a total of three Elemental Chakra String Affinities per battle.
    -Can only use 5 times per battle (once per element).
    -Can only be used by Puppet Users.
    -Stays in effect for two turns
    -Must wait 3 turns to use again.
    -Lighting paralyzing last two turns.
    -Can be used on existing strings
    - Can control puppets while in effect
    - Can only be taught be Black Uchiha

    ||Both Declined|| As I said, similar techniques exist. Also, the second one was not really changed. It seems more like you tried to hide the exclusion of the restrictions by emphasizing smaller numbers. Either way, the second one is OP and has a duration that is far too great for it's level.

    (Seigi no kodai no amyuretto to gantoretto) Ancient Amulet and Gauntlet of the Righteous
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Points: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: This two part weapon consists of an amulet wore around the neck and a gauntlet that dons the right arm of the user. This combo was said to be forged from the Insect King’s right arm. As the story goes, the Insect King fell into a large river, and on the brink of death was saved by a righteous human (thought to be an Aburame member). Thereafter the Insect King had the weapon combo made and gave it to the man as a sign of his gratitude, his loyalty, and the loyalty of his family and all the insects under his rule. The Insect King told the man to pass these items throughout his bloodline and the insects would be there to help them. This was thought to be the first contract with insects, the Aburame’s insects to be more specific.

    Abilities: The Gauntlet can block and deflect normal weapons with ease, it has an extendable blade (kunai sized) above the wrist. It can also absorb 3 A-rank and below techniques of the opponent, and can have the user channel his chakra into it indefinitely. Upon absorption the gauntlet takes on the properties of the absorbed element (Claw of flame= Normal, Phoenix of light= Wind, Morning Jewel= Water, Susanou= Lightning, Abaddon= Earth, Hephaisto= Fire)

    The Amulet grants the insects that serve/help the wielder something called chakra sharing, where after absorbing an elemental chakra into the gauntlet, it then is transferred to the insects, that help the user, giving them and elemental coating and the properties of that element. The amulet also makes the user more in tune with his insects, letting him/her feel/know what they know.
    Photos: Amulet: http://i98.photobucket.com/albums/l2...1/images-3.jpg
    Gauntlet: http://i169.photobucket.com/albums/u.../Gauntlets.jpg

    Notes:
    -Can only absorb 3 techs per battle (A-rank & below)
    -Can only use chakra sharing 3 times per battle
    -Gauntlet change/absorption last 2 turns (infused gauntlet & blade)
    -Coating last 2 turns or 1 move
    -The coating doesn’t increase power just gives elemental properties
    -Absorbtion counts as one of the users 3 moves
    -Can only be used/lent by Black Uchiha

    Amulet:

    Gauntlet:


    ~Declined~ You stacked too many abilities. Take out the whole part about you absorbing attacks and replace it by you infusing a certain elemental chakra in the gauntlet, this way you can keep the rest of the abilities. Define in details what the coating and elemental properties do on the insects. Take out the bold part, this isn't the Rinnegan, you don't share a vision of your bugs and I don't want you to have thousands of insects as your personal eyes on the field. Where are the restrictions? There's no drawbacks whatsoever.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Kokoro no Go-Ruden Ikazuchi): Heart of the Golden Thunder
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 45
    Damage Points: 20(If Blades are in contact with opponents weapon)
    Description:
    The legend tells it that these dual blades were created especially for the founder of Kumogakure in other words for the First Raikage,whos name up to this very day is unknown.Crafted by master blacksmith and given the ability to be infused with lightning chakra and none other then lightning.The hidden power of these Dual Blades can only be awakened in the hands of lightning expert.To be fully able to use the Blade's Power one must have fully mastered lightning release.Once infused with lightning the blades have fully increased their cutting power more then standard wind infused weapons.If these blades are used for blocking opponents weapons such as katana,swords,kunai etc. it will automaticly be electrified causing a shock to opponents body.If lightning jutsus are used along with these blades it adds +10 Damage to lightning techniques up to A Rank, techniques wich are S Rank have +5 more Damage.These blades have their very own lightning techniques wich need to be awakened by the user.Its been told that before First Raikages death he sealed some of his lightning chakra into the blades wich is why the blades have been given name Heart of Golden Thunder.Once in the hands of a true lightning master the lightning that is channeled into the blade takes on a much brighter form then normaly.

    Note: Lightning techniques wich are up to A Rank have their damage increases by +10, the ones wich are S Rank are increased by +5.
    Note: This effect can only be used three times per battle.
    Note: Lightning infusion lasts four turns.
    Note: Drains chakra every turn when effect is active. (-5)
    Note: Able to deflect one A-Rank and up earth techniques per battle(counts as users move).
    Note: Able to deflect two B-Rank and below earth techniques per battle(counts as users move).
    Note: Electrically Shocked on touch if not lightning specialist.
    Note: Can only be used by Zancrow.

    ||Declined||
    Resubmiting

    I bolded the changes.

    (Kokoro no Go-Ruden Ikazuchi): Heart of the Golden Thunder
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description:
    The legend tells us that these double blades were created on the legendary mountain Olimp especially by the Gods for one and only Zeus.How did these blades come down on to the earth and ended up in the hands of immortals is a true mystery.Even trought this is just a legend there are several people that truly belive this is true.Double blades have been found on the top of one of the biggest mountains in Kumogakure and since then they have been passed down from generation to generation amoung Kumogakure Elite Shinobi.Its been said that the Blades true power can only awaken once in the hands in true lightning master.One these blades are infused with users lightning chakra their special effect will awake giving the user more damage on any lightning technique he uses.When users chakra is infused a small sparks of lightning will form around the double blades creating a glow resembeling the golden color awakening the true power of the blades the effects can now be used for 3 turns.Once the effect wears off double blades can be used as any regural weapon.



    Note: Effects can be used only once per battle and lasts 3 turns.
    Note: Chakra infusion counts as one of three moves per turn.
    Note: Able to deflect one A-Rank and up earth techniques per battle(counts as users move).
    Note: Able to deflect two B-Rank and below earth techniques per battle(counts as users move).
    Note: Can only be used by Zancrow.

    This week's CJ.

    (Hatsu Shakuzen): Hearts Awakening
    Type: Weapon effect
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: +10
    Description: When user infuses his Lightning chakra into his Double Blades (Heart of the Golden Thunder) it starts slowly releasing lightning chakra, creating the electricity in air around the double blades and boosting lightning jutsus. Adding more chakra to jutsus which the user released makes them only do more damage and doesn’t extend their range.
    Note: Effect can be used only once per battle and lasts 3 turns.
    Note: Can only be used if holding Double Blades.
    Note: Can only be used by Zancrow.

    Both Declined. Effect is too similar to the God of lightning weapon made for the seven swordmen of the mist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    ( Hakke Chimetaki Tengai )-Eight Trigrams: Fatal Horizon
    Type: Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user slams one of his fists in his palm, releasing several silvery-white blades of chakra from highly concentrated chakra from their feet, 360 degrees around them. The blades can reach up to mid-range, and have enough force to not only repel the opponent several feet away, they also can inflict major damage to the opponents vital organs depending on what part of the body the blades hit.
    -User must be Hyuuga
    -Must have mastered Jyuuken.
    -Can only be used/taught by -Liquid Cefka-

    resubmit with verification. I may be missing something but if your feet are on the ground, how are you shooting blades from your feet and making it hit the opponent's vital organs?

    ( レガリア Oni Regalia )-Demon Regalia
    Type: Weapon
    Ranks: S
    Chakra: N/A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The Demon Regalia is the sword given to Jinnouske by his Master on his deathbed. It measures around 4 feet long, and 2 feet wide, and emitts a purple-ish black aura around the blade. Gold design cover small regions of the swords' hilt, and in the middle-most part of the hilt lies the symbol of Oda. The origins and creation of the sword is unknown, only rumored to have been wielded by A demon king known as Nobunaga Oda, who ruled in a distant reality....Long with the swords mysterious exterior, powerful chakra lie on its interior. The chakra inside the blade alows the user to not only absorb fire natured chakra, it also allows one to mold it and shape it to their liking once absorbed.
    -Can be used throught the entirety of the battle
    -Can be used at beginning of the battle
    -Can only absorb up to C-Rank fire jutsu
    -Can only absorb Fire jutsu twice per battle
    -Can only be given by -Liquid Cefka-

    Declined. Too similar to the God of fire sword made for the seven swordsmen of the mist group.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Katon: Seijou Sono Kontan) Fire release: Cleanse The Soul
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points:
    Description: The user will coat the inside of their lungs with Katon chakra as they flow Katon chakra to their lungs and will release the sent katon chakra inside their lungs making a wave of heat flow from their lungs and out of their mouth. This wave of heat is not for attacking, this wave of heat will get rid of any microscopic particles from the users lungs that may have been placed there from the opponent. For instance, some opponents may use a jutsu that releases particles into the air that when you breath it in, it stops further breathing. If that is to happen, this jutsu will be used and will create a small volume of heat that will push the particles out. It is a fact that the human eyes can see particles if they are up close, however, they can barely see it but can still see it. A skilled ninja with trained eyes such as a swift user who has had training in swift style Taijutsu can see particles naturally and use this jutsu as a defense to techniques that use particles to stop breathing as described before. The particles would be removed from the users lungs and expelled out from their mouth in a matter of seconds.

    - Can only be used 3x per battle.

    Declined. This seems like something you would need medical training to use without burning your lungs into charcoal. If you add that restriction I will approve it.

    (Suiton: Umou Itsuryuu) Water release: Down Pour
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A Rank
    Range: Short-long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user will use a jutsu causing rain to fall from the sky, they will then use this technique which will make water fall so much heavier and faster that it blocks vision of the user and opponent and will drown out sound of minor movements like foot steps ect. This rain makes it impossible to use certain lightning techniques that makes lightning come from the users body like nagashi because there is so much water that's raining down that if someone tries to use a technique like that then they will shock themselves. This technique also provides a water source for water jutsus up to C rank and extends the range of water techniques up to C rank by 1 range upon creation. However this will deduct -10 damage from any fire techniques used from either the opponent or user due to elemental advantage.

    Notes:
    - This rain lasts for 3 turns.
    - This can be used only once per battle.
    - Requires a technique that makes it rain before using.
    - Must have mastered water release to use.
    - Must be at least Sannin to use.

    Declined. No range alteration. Please a little more specific about the lightning jutsu being affected. It shouldnt have any effect on the opponent if they use lightning jutsu like raikiri, chidori sharp spear, gain, or lightning aror, because those are all concentrated collections of chakra and lightnign cant conduct through individual rain drops (even though there are alot of them)

    (Jeet Kun Do)
    Type: Supplementary/offense/defense
    Rank: S Rank
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Jeet Kun Do is a hybrid martial arts system and life philosophy founded by martial artist Bruce Lee with direct, non classical and straightforward movements. Due to the way his style works they believe in minimal movement with maximum effect and extreme speed. The system works on the use of different 'tools' for different situations. These situations are broken down into ranges (Kicking, Punching, Trapping and Grappling), with techniques flowing smoothly between them. It is referred to as a "style without style". Unlike more traditional martial arts, Jeet Kune Do is not fixed or patterned, and is a philosophy with guiding thoughts. It was named for the concept of interception, or attacking your opponent while he is about to attack. He believed that combat was spontaneous, and that a martial artist cannot predict it, only react to it, and that a good martial artist should "Be like water" and move fluidly without hesitation. Water is infinitely flexible. It can be seen through, and yet at other times it can obscure things from sight. It can split and go around things, rejoining on the other side, or it can crash through things. It can erode the hardest rocks by gently lapping away at them or it can flow past the tiniest pebble. The user needs to calm his mind completely, focus and wait for the opponent to strike. They will then use the opponents attacking force against them as the user moves in a relaxed state with fluid motion to take advantage of the opponents openings as the opponent attacks. Someone who masters Jeet Kun Do would have great reaction time, triple of what they had before being able to react instantly to normal taijutsu users. In close range a Jeet Kun Do master (like Bruce) can move a limb in the blink of an eye with great force, quickly catching the opponent off guard. Jeet Kune Do seeks to waste no time or movement, teaching that the simplest things work best. Economy of motion is the principle by which Jeet Kun Do practitioners achieve:

    Efficiency: An attack which reaches its target in the least amount of time, with maximum force.

    Directness: Doing what comes naturally in a disciplined way.

    Simplicity: Thinking in an uncomplicated manner; without ornamentation.

    This is meant to help a practitioner conserve both energy and time; two crucial components in a physical confrontation. Maximized force seeks to end the battle quickly due to the amount of damage inflicted upon the opponent. Rapidity aims to reach the target before the opponent can react, which is half-beat faster timing, learned in Wing Chun and Western boxing.
    "When the distance is wide, the attacking opponent requires some sort of preparation. Therefore, attack him on his preparation of attack." "To reach me, you must move to me. Your attack offers me an opportunity to intercept you."This means intercepting an opponent's attack with an attack of your own instead of a simple block. It is for this concept Jeet Kune Do is named. JKD practitioners believe that this is the most difficult defensive skill to develop. This strategy is a feature of some traditional Chinese martial arts, as well as an essential component of European épée fencing. Stop hits & kicks utilize the principle of economy of motion by combining attack and defense into one movement thus minimizing the "time" element.

    Simultaneous parrying & punching
    When confronting an incoming attack, the attack is parried or deflected and a counter attack is delivered at the same time. Not as advanced as a stop hit but more effective than blocking and counter attacking in sequence. This is practiced by some Chinese martial arts. Simultaneous parrying & punching utilizes the principle of economy of motion by combining attack and defense into one movement thus minimizing the "time" element and maximizing the "energy" element. Efficiency is gained by utilizing a parry rather than a block. By definition a "block" stops an attack whereas a parry merely re-directs an attack. Redirection has two advantages: It requires less energy to execute; it utilizes the opponents energy against them by creating an imbalance. Efficiency is gained in that the opponent has less time to react to the nullification of their attack while having to worry about defending an incoming attack.

    Low kicks
    JKD practitioners believe they should target their kicks to their opponent's shins, knees, thighs, and mid section. These targets are the closest to the foot, provide more stability and are more difficult to defend against. However, as with all other JKD principles nothing is "written in stone". If a target of opportunity presents itself, even a target above the waist, one could take advantage of the situation without feeling hampered by this principle. Maintaining low kicks utilizes the principle of economy of motion by reducing the distance a kick must travel thus minimizing the "time" element.

    Five ways of attack
    * Simple Angular Attack (SAA) / Simple Direct Attack (SDA). Is a simple motion (punch or kick) which moves with no effort to conceal it, directly to the target on the most economical route. It can be indirect, beginning on one line and ending on another. Such as a punch that starts to the stomach (mid line) and ends on the chin (high line). SAA is an attack that is launched from an unanticipated angle that is achieved by moving in such a way as to create an open line into which to strike.
    * Attack By Combinations (ABC). This is using multiple rapid attacks, with volume of attack as a means of overcoming the opponent.
    * Progressive Indirect Attack (PIA). Simulating an attack to one part of the opponent's body, followed by attacking another part, as a means of creating an opening.
    * Hand Immobilization Attack (HIA) and its counterpart Foot Immobilization * attack, which make use of trapping/parrying to limit the opponent's function with that appendage.
    Attack By Drawing (ABD). The goal when using attack by draw is to "draw" the opponent into a committed attack by baiting him into what looks like an exposed target, then intercepting his motion. One can execute a motion that invites a counter, then counter attack them as he takes the bait


    - Can only be taught to S-class and above who have learned basic taijutsu.
    - To master the user must learn the style of fighting, all of it's techniques and spar with the creator in a Taijutsu only match.
    - Can only be taught by ~Yard~

    ~Approved~

    Just make sure to check out the other tai styles so you do not inadvertantly copy any of thier moves.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Quote Originally Posted by wastedmonkey View Post
    (Raiton: Raikou Yuki) - Lightning Release: Lightning Revenant

    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40(+5 for every turn active)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Risen from the souls of the fallen and forgotten, the revenant courses through battle a fiery remembrance of the ill fate that the damned of war are destined to fulfill. The user will make 8 hands seals and release huge amounts of raiton chakra into the field. The raiton chakra will take a form of a ninja that is made out of lightning but twice as big as the user.

    Note: Revenant last on the field until destroyed
    Note: Revenant can only use raiton jutsu up to A-rank
    Note: Jutsu used by the Revenant count as a move
    Note: Revenant is unaffected by raiton jutsu
    Note: If Revenant gets hit by S-rank jutsu or A-rank wind it will be destroyed
    Note: User cant use raiton jutsu when revenant is on the field
    Note: User can only use up to A-rank raiton jutsu for two turns after Revenant is destroyed
    Note: Only usable once per battle.
    Note: Can only be used/taught by WastedMonkey



    New Weapon Ability

    (Kanshō and Bakuya - Raiton: Dendo Shio) - Kanshō and Bakuya - Lightning Release: Electric TideType: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user first pierce the ground/wall with one sword. Then the users charges huge amounts of raiton chakra into the other sword. The swords, having a strong bond with each other, will channel the raiton chakra. The sword that is not with the user will then release an electrical tide of lightning around it (in a horizontal manner up going outwards up to mid range from the sword).

    Note: Usable only twice
    Note: No Raiton Jutsu for a turn after use

    Note: If user gets hit by the tide, user will take half the damageNote: Only usable if user wields Kanshō and Bakuya
    Note: Can only be use/taught by WastedMonkey

    looks something like this




    ~Declined~ Both technique already exist (the first one was made in another element).

    Here is the other Jutsu that i think you were saying


    Quote Originally Posted by wastedmonkey View Post
    (Doton: Tochi Kyojin) - Earth Release: Earth Behemoth
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will gather their doton chakra and the release it into the ground. Earth will then rise up from the ground in a for of a Behemoth up to its mid section. The Behemoth can spit out several spear like projectiles that can be use to attack the oppenent. The giant can also use its hands to attack to opponent.

    Note: Can be used only once per battle.
    Note: Last on the field until destroyed.
    Note: Spear like projectiles are A-rank Doton Jutsu.
    Note: It cannot move around the field.
    Note: Moves made by the behemoth counts as 1 of the 3 moves per turn (shooting spikes counts as a move).
    Note: No Doton jutsu while still on the field.
    Note: Can only be use/taught by WastedMonkey.

    ~Approved~


    *i did not bold any because i did not change any.

    (Raiton: Raikou Yuki) - Lightning Release: Lightning Revenant

    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40(+5 for every turn active)
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Risen from the souls of the fallen and forgotten, the revenant courses through battle a fiery remembrance of the ill fate that the damned of war are destined to fulfill. The user will make 8 hands seals and release huge amounts of raiton chakra into the field. The raiton chakra will take a form of a ninja that is made out of lightning but twice as big as the user.

    Note: Revenant last on the field until destroyed
    Note: Revenant can only use raiton jutsu up to A-rank
    Note: Jutsu used by the Revenant count as a move
    Note: Revenant is unaffected by raiton jutsu
    Note: If Revenant gets hit by S-rank jutsu or A-rank wind it will be destroyed
    Note: User cant use raiton jutsu when revenant is on the field
    Note: User can only use up to A-rank raiton jutsu for two turns after Revenant is destroyed
    Note: Only usable once per battle.
    Note: Can only be use/taught by WastedMonkey

    ||Pending|| Leaving for Izuna.

    I re-did the whole description of the jutsu below

    ~Declined~ I was very clear when I said it already existed. No it's not the one you pointed out.

    (Kanshō and Bakuya - Raiton: Dendo Kyo) - Kanshō and Bakuya - Lightning Release: Electric Void
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: S
    Range Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user first pierce the ground/wall with one sword. Then the users charges huge amounts of raiton chakra into the other sword. The swords, having a strong bond with each other, will channel the raiton chakra. The sword that is not with the user will then release a V shaped electrical surge of lightning towards the other sword which will do the same. Once the surges connect it will fill the space in between with Lightning covering everything in a pyramid shape. Once trap inside you cannot use any suiton or raiton jutsu since the space is filled with lightning.
    Note: Usable only once
    Note: Pyramid will stay on the feild for two turns
    Note: If the user gets hit by the surge he will take full damage
    Note: User can be trapped inside
    Note: Raiton and Suiton Jutsu from the outside gains +10 in damage
    Note: No Raiton Jutsu 3 turns after use
    Note: Cannot use any other Kanshō and Bakuya Techs until end of match
    Note: Only usable if user wields Kanshō and Bakuya
    Note: Can only be use/taught by WastedMonkey

    looks something like this



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    (raitoningurirīsu: Sutatikkunoizu) lightning release: Static noise
    type: Attack/defense
    rank: B
    range: Short-long
    chakra cost: 25
    damage points: 40 (+ 10 on hearing enhanced individuals and in caves, wooded areas…etc)
    description: The user utilizing the lightning chakra’s crackling sound, sends his/her lightning chakra throughout the field. The result is a loud static noise (i. E. Radio static, & tv static noise) that hurts the ears of the opponent(s). The user, being the one sending out the raiton chakra wont be affected by the jutsu. This noise can cancel sound jutsu of the same rank and below. This technique also is more effective on hearing enhanced individuals of any kind and in caves, wooded areas…etc.

    Note: Only usable 3 times per battle
    note: Static noise last for 2 turns
    note: Can only be taught by wastedmonkey and black uchiha
    *co-creator black uchiha

    *just like when charging up chidori, the user wont get harmed because he is using his raiton chakra to charge it*

    ~Declined~ You don't seem to understand my point. Sound is causing damage, not lightning. Since you're not a sound ninja, you can't control it not to harm you, so it would still be extremely harmful to you.

    (Raitoningurirīsu: Seiteki noizu) Lightning Release: Static noise
    type: Attack/defense
    rank: A
    range: Short-long
    chakra cost: 30
    damage points: 60 (+ 10 on hearing enhanced individuals and in caves, wooded areas…etc)
    description: The user cover their inner ears with a special lightning chakra and sends their raiton chakra throughout the field. Utilizing the raiton chakra’s crackling sound, the result is a loud static noise (i. e. Radio static, & tv static noise) that hurts the ears of the opponent(s). This noise can cancel sound jutsu of the same rank and below. This technique also is more effective on hearing enhanced individuals of any kind and in caves, wooded areas…etc.

    Note: Only usable 3 times per battle
    Note: Static noise last for 2 turns
    Note: The ear coating chakra protects he user from the noise
    Note: The ear coating chakra can only be produced by the user.

    Note: Co-created and can only be use/taught by Black Uchiha and WastedMonkey
    ||Pending|| Leaving for Izuna, but I don't buy the bold part.

    ~Declined~ Why would lightning protect you in any way? Furthermore, the "earplug" idea was done ages ago and is therefore considered a rip-off (the original was made of earth).
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Genjutsu: Modotte daidokoro de)- Illusion technique: Back in the kitchen
    Rank: A
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 30
    Damage points:
    Description: User inserts his chakra into targets brain, giving the targeted woman extreme need to go back in the kitchen and make a pie. The jutsu is canceled if the targeted woman is attacked. If the jutsu is succesfull, the target won't get back on the battlefield, untill the pie is made.

    - Once per battle
    - Only works on women
    ||Declined|| Don't take this the wrong way. I actually WANTED to approve this.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Hebi Chakra Heigo) - Snake Chakra Absorption
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self Range
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user will absorb a snake with any chakra nature into his being, allowing him to use the chakra nature that the snake possessed until the end of the battle.

    Note: Must be a snake user
    Note: Must be the summoner of the snake being absorbed (cannot absorb another persons snake)
    Note: Lasts till the end of battle, unless cancelled and expelled by the user
    Note: Can only be used 3 times

    ~Declined~ I see where you're going with this I won't allow you to have Wood or Ice if your bio isn't an Ice/Wood user.
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    (Kuchiyose: Shikotsumyaku Hebi) ~ Dead Bone Pulse Snake
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: S-Rank
    Range: Short/Mid/Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Orochimaru fused the cells of Kimimaro Kaguya, into the genes of Manda. The snake is half the size of Manda with bone platelets for scales. It has the ability to use Shikotsumyaku jutsus.

    ~Shikotsumyaku jutsus require the use of said jutsu, and count toward the maximum 3 jutsus per turn as per Rei's R&R
    ~Can only be summoned once per battle
    ~The snake can only stay on the field for 5 turns
    ~Can only be summoned by someone who knows wood, or Orochimaru

    ~Pending~ Leaving for a Shikotsumyaku master to check.
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    (Fuuinjutsu: Kilo Kilo Mode) - Sealing Technique: Kilo Kilo Mode
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user, using this sealing technique, will seal and/or unseal gases and weight compartments inside his/her body, fluctuating the weight that person weighs. Can make the person lighter than air (to the point of overly negative, allowing flight) , or weigh 100,00 kilos. This causes no stress on the body, nor does it show (meaning you dont get fat or skinny).

    Note: No other fuuinjutsu while in this mode
    Note: No fuuinjutsu after use of this mode
    Note: Can only be used 1 time
    Note: The user will not feel the difference, allowing him to move freely as normal, with this added or subtracted weight

    ||Pending|| Leaving for another mod.

    ~Declined~ Never submit Cannon techniques (or rip off of cannon techniques). This is the Tsuchikage's technique and will be added to the cannon list in time.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Katon:Go-ruden engai) Fire release: Golden dome
    Rank: S
    Type: Supplementary
    Range: Self Range
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 60
    Description:The user runs at the opponent and kicks him up sending him into the sky and then once the opponent is in mid air he will create a circular fire dome which will then surround the opponent and the dome can be control to shrink or expand to his will.

    Note:Must have the opponent in mid air
    Note:Can be used twice per battle
    Note:No Fire above S-rank for a turn

    ||Declined|| Please elaborate. Also, there are a ton of 360 fire domes out there. You probably should consider not bothering with this.

    (Katon:Kaen shippuu) - Burning Hurricane
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S-rank
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 60
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user focuses on his fire chakra and then he releases a large amount of it which then at the same time he spits it out he combines wind chakra together to create this hurricane. The hurrican will be set ablaze creating a fire/wind combo that is quite strong.This attack can only be created in front of the opponent

    Note: Can only be used once
    Note: No S-rank fire or above the two turns
    Note:If the user creates the hurricane in short range while he is in it,he will receive 1/2 the damage.

    ||Declined|| Similar Technique Exists (Actually, it's practically an exact replica of one of Ragnaroc's customs)


    (Futon:Kaze bodi ) Wind release: Wind blade body
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: short
    Chakra cost: 50
    Damage points: 80
    Description: The user will focus wind chakra around the body then he creates a small spinning wind blade which he will keep atleast one inch away from his body and after that the small wind blades will appear around the user body this wind will slice normal objects and humans it comes in contact with but the user can control the wind blades that he sends at the desired target.

    Note:Can be used Once per battle
    Note:No wind for a turn
    Note:Can only shoot three wind blades before the jutsu is gone

    ||Declined|| I think I get what you're trying to say, but the description is generic. What makes it different from a close proximity wind blade? Also, the chakra cost is incorrect.
     
         
    Last edited by RokuNR; 11-22-2011 at 02:31 AM.

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