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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Uchiwa no Jutsu: Toku Kaze Jouten) Fan Technique: Shield of the Wind God
    Type: Defense, Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: With a Giant Fan, Temari will spin in one place and hold out her fan in front of her to create a Whirlwind that will stay around her as a shield. The technique can only block A rank or below jutsu(still follows elements disadvantage/advantage). If the enemy is hit by this shield, they will suffer deep cuts on the body.
    *Only Temari can use this.
    *Can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze.
    Declined, requires restrictions and if follows elemental disadvantage sand advantages then it needs to be noted that this is a wind technique

    (Uchiwa no Jutsu:Appu Rifuto) Fan Technique: Uplift
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Temari will open her fan to the third star and make one big swing towards the ground, lifting her towards the sky. This is to be used to get out of the way of incoming attacks.
    *Can only be used by Temari
    *Can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze
    Declined, being A rank requires some useage restrictions

    (Uchiwa no Jutsu: Kaze Dan'yaku) Fan Technique: Wind Ammunition
    Type:Attack, Defense
    Rank:S
    Range:Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: Temari will swing her fan towards her target. With each swing, she releases a wind bullet that can leave severe cuts to the target and knock them unconscious. The max number of swings she can make is three. For each swing after one will count as a jutsu used of the available three in a turn.
    *Can only be used 2 times
    *Only Temari can use this
    *Can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze
    Declined, similar jutsu exists
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    (Fuuton: Toku Kaze Jouten) Wind Release: Shield of the Wind God
    Type: Defense, Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: With a Giant Fan, Temari will spin in one place and hold out her fan in front of her to create a Whirlwind that will stay around her as a shield. The technique can only block A rank or below jutsu(still follows elements disadvantage/advantage). If the enemy is hit by this shield, they will suffer deep cuts on the body.
    *Only Temari can use this.
    *The whirlwind stay active on the field for 2 turns before dispersing.
    *Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    *Can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze.

    ~Approved~ I added a restriction.

    (Uchiwa no Jutsu:Appu Rifuto) Fan Technique: Uplift
    Type:Supplementary
    Rank:A
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:N/A
    Description: Temari will open her fan to the third star and make one big swing towards the ground, lifting her towards the sky. This is to be used to get out of the way of incoming attacks.
    *Can only be used by Temari
    *Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    *Can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze

    ~Approved~

    New:
    (Ranton: To Yubi) Storm Release: Ten Fingers
    Type:Attack, Defense
    Rank:S(if all 10 fingers used), A(five fingers are used)
    Range:Short-Long
    Chakra Cost:40(ten fingers), 30(five fingers)
    Damage:80(ten fingers), 60(five fingers)
    Description:The user will make the snake handseal and gather his Storm chakra into their hands. The user will then concentrate and divide the chakra to all fingertips. The user will fire the concentrated chakra and make beams of lightning shoot out from their fingertips. The user will be able to control the beams from mid range only. Each individual blast from a hand will unite right before impact with the target to create a massive blast. The blast is strong enough to leave internal damages.
    *Can only be used once per turn
    *No Storm techniques for the next 3 turns
    *No Lightning and Water techniques above A rank for the next turn.
    *If only five fingers are used, only no Storm techniques for the next turn.
    *Can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Enzup View Post
    Resubmitting

    (Ketteiteki Benso) - Ultimate Defense
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80 (if someone tries to cross it)
    Description: After creating 3 shadow clones, one clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra in it to create a shield of hollow sphere around themselves of 10m radius, whose small part is below the earh, so from above the surface it looks like a dome. This shield can block 1 forbidden jutsu completely.
    Note: ~User must create atleast 3 shadow clones before using this jutsu.
    ~Can only be used twice per battle.
    ~Counts as 3 moves in the user's turn.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.



    ~Approved~ Like I said in the previous submission, you're using 3 chakras, so this technique counts as 3 moves. I added a note to clarify that part.

    (Senpai Sutikku) - Elder Wand
    Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: 50
    Damage Points: 100
    Description: The Elder Wand, also known as the Deathstick, the Wand of Destiny, is the fabled Deathly Hallow. Bestowed on Enzup, supposedly by Death himself after he requested, as his bounty, the strongest wand in the history of wizardkind.
    The Elder Wand is ancient and made up of elder wood with coating of unknown subtance on it with a core of Thestral tail hair, thats make the wand unbreakable. It is fifteen inches long. If anyone even touches it without the user's permission, then he will receive a huge amount of pain in his body, forcing him to drop the wand. Whenever user says "Accio", wherever the wand is, it quickly gets to the user (if somewhere nearby) in a blink of an eye. Most Spells are done with the aid of wands (customs posting soon), and one of the major ability is that while the wand is in the possession of user, user dont have to perform any handseals for any jutsu, instead of that he has to swing his wand in a circular movement and give a little flick pointing towards his target. And when flick is done a bright white light apprears at the tip of the wand for a second.
    Note: ~Due to the white light, opponent can easily find the user, if user is hiding.
    ~It is considered to have life of its own (like samehada) and it can sense chakra.
    ~If summoned then it lasts for 5 turns, and have to perform a series of 8 handseals before summoning it.
    ~Can only be used by Enzup.

    List of spells (customs posting soon)



    ~Declined~ While I was for the idea of INTRODUCING HP to our RP, you've over done it. No hand seals? Accio whenever you want? Why the hell would it be forbidden?

    All in all, adapt it to the Narutoverse, not the opposite. If it's not drastically different (in a good way) in your next resubmission, I'll be forced to decline it for good.




    Resubmitting removed- can block one s-rank attack and take on one more of any rank jutsu. and added weakness (bolded)

    (Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus it will be destroyed after taking one S-rank technique. (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank)
    Note:~Can't use any jutsu of earth in next whole turn.
    ~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
    ~Can be used 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Approved~ Took out the part about needing to destroy 3 towers to stop the techniques.
    Since this jutsu counts as my 4 moves, and can block only 1 jutsu, so i am updating it and making it a lil bit OP , as i am also restricting that i will only be able to use 2 moves per turn.

    (Ketteiteki Benso) - Ultimate Defense
    Type: Defense
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 50 (+30 for every turn i.e. +10 for each)
    Damage Points: 90 (if someone tries to cross it) [-30 to user]
    Description: After creating 3 shadow clones, one clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra in it to create a shield of hollow sphere around themselves of 10m radius, whose small part is below the earh, so from above the surface it looks like a dome. This shield can block any no. of jutsus upto forbidden rank till the time it is active, and for that clones must continue to release their respective chakras in the dome. As user will be trapped inside that dome, so for attacking purpose he can make a single handseal, so that a appropriate size of hole/opening will be made in the dome and from which he can use his jutsu on his target and than again by making a single handseal, the hole/opening closes.
    Note: ~User must create atleast 3 shadow clones before using this jutsu.
    ~This technique lasts 3 turns.
    ~If one clone is made to poofed away, than the ability of dome will be decreased and thus it can block two rank lesser techniques i.e. upto A-rank, and if two clones than upto B-rank. And if all three clones, than this technique ends right there.
    ~Opponent can't use the earth below the user, which is in sphere for any purpose. As that earth is separated from the main earth, due to lightning chakra from sphere, neither user can use the earth below him to slam his hands on the earth to manipulate the earth outside the sphere.
    ~User can only use 2 moves each turn due to excessive chakra used.

    ~Counts as 3 moves in the user's turn.
    ~ -30 damage to user due to excessive amount of chakra used.
    ~Can only be used once per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ Even if it took the remainders of your turns for the match and caused you to die after using it I wouldn't approve a technique that can block absolutely anything. Ever.
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    (Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
    Type: Defense
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus blocking any jutsu upto S-Rank (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank) and can take on one more attack.
    Note:~Can't use any earth jutsu of S-rank and above in same turn.
    ~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
    ~Can be used 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Enzup.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
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    This is my first CJ or rather CW, that i really wants to get approved, as i worked on it so heartedly.

    Shinigami Reaper | Death God Reaper
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra: 50
    Damage: 100
    Description: Once the two Giant Death Gods, one from Heaven, and one from Hell were fightning for a holy sword named "Shinigami Reaper", since it was sword who stated that the winner will be the weilder of it. So even after their 100th fight, the result was the same, Draw. Since none of them was the winner and they do not wanted to give it to their opponent. So they, along with the sword decided to give the sword to someone else. And than they met Enzup, both of them tried to kill him, but couldn't be succeeded. So they liked his true braveness, skills, and mastery in fightning. So they bestowned the sword on Enzup, in hope that he is the one capable of holding it, but the sword was the one who had to chose his master himself, it was upto the sword that it would accept him or not, but the sword was the one who liked Enzup the most and decided to help him conquer anything he wants.
    Since the sword was of those Giant Gods, so its size is also very big. The hilt itself is of 2m height, and the blade is of 3m height making a total lenght of 5m, and its cross guard is of 1m length, while the blade is of half meter. It is a double-edged sword. And have a little curvature in the edge part and pointed on front. It also have a very long chain tied to pommel part. The blade is bloody red in colour which is supposed to be the blood of millions of people killed by it. It also has 2 black strips originating from the rain guard to some extent on blade, and it was supposed to be the curse of people died from it. Its original weight is 1 ton but for user its only 1 kg, superlight weight that allows him to use it more fluently and reaction time of user while using the sword is much more fast than of anyone else using a sword.
    It is considered to have life of its own just like samehada. This sword is indestructible by all means and considerd to be sharpest in the whole world, and even in hell or heaven. Thats the reason, user must wield it very carefully, or else he'll just cut himself off. User can also pass any of his chakra to change the shape of its blade and creates a thick layer coating on sword.

    Abilities:
    -The sword can anytime increase or decrease its weight from 10 ton to 10 Kg.
    -This sword is indestructible and have enormous amount of chakra.
    -It can react on its own when required. Can also sense chakra.
    -It can cut and slice through anything just like butter.
    -When Chakra is passed to the sword, than the hilt remains the same but the blade transforms to |Fire- Phoenix|, |Water-Shark|, |Earth- Dragon|, |Lightning- Snakes|, |Wind- Porcupine|

    Restrictions:
    -As this sword was of those Giant Death Gods, which is very heavy and big in size and have some incredible powers, so it is forbidden to use this weapon.
    -Passing any chakra to the sword, counts as a move, which is equivalent to S-rank offense/Defense/Supplementary.
    -Can channel chakra to the sword only once per turn.
    -Must be kenjutsu mastered, as it requires great skills in that.
    -Can only be used if user is of atleast Kage Rank.
    -The sword can only be wielded by Enzup. If someone else even touches the sword or any part of it, than it will paralyze him completely for one turn.


    ~Declined~ 10 ton is unacceptable, you could easily destroy anything on the field with such a heavy sword. No shape shifting, unless the shapes are pre-determined and well explained. I saw that the shapes were animals, but can the weapon shape at will into anything? Why is the damage 100? Does it damage you opponent just by being in your possession? We don't put damages to CW unless they have a special ability that triggers and attack. Sensing abilities are forbidden from the CJ thread (Or so I heard from Cali). Lastly, the restrictions are almost non-existent for such a weapon, you need to fix that.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Kenjutsu Yori za Mizu Megami: Amatsu Myaku Danmaku) - Sword Arts of the Water Goddess: Heavenly Pulse Barrage
    Rank: C
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description: The user will make a sequence of cross slashes with their sword (Up to four) and finish it off with a powerful horizontal slash across the targets abdomen. By utilizing the moister in the air, the user can manipulate the water molecules in the to release a shock wave. Due to the water molecules being very little in size, only doujutsu is capable of actually seeing the shock wave being created. A regular ninja will think its a simple combination of slashes. Once the blade of the sword connects, the shock waves will be released. Even if the blade is blocked, the small shock waves will knock the opponent back, causing him/her breathing difficulty for one turn.

    Note: Must have mastered Water
    Note: Must have mastered Kenjutsu
    Note: Must be taught by Mathias

    (Kenjutsu Yori za Mizu Megami: Teritori-Senro) - Sword Arts of the Water Goddess: Territorial Line
    Rank: B
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: While in short range of the opponent, the user will unsheathe his sword and in one swift motion, he will deliver a horizontal slash going across the ground in front of him, creating a territorial line, or also known as "Do not cross this line". As the opponent is completely dumbfounded as to why the user is slashing the ground, the user manipulates the water molecules in the air around the sword's blade to release a delayed shock wave that will send the opponent flying backwards. The shock wave is set to be released after the line is complete. While in mid range from the opponent, the user will unsheathe his sword while charging towards his target with chakra infused in his feet. In one swift motion he will set the tip of his blade down into the ground and let it grind against the ground as he makes his way over to his opponent. The user will then, with one hand, swing the sword upwards leaving the opponent dumbfounded as to why the user has done that. In reality the user was manipulating the water molecules in the air around the sword's blade to release a delayed shock wave that will send the opponent flying backwards. The shock wave is set to be released after the sword is swung upwards.

    Note: Can only be used four times
    Note: Only one range version can be used per technique usage.
    Note: Must have mastered Water
    Note: Must have mastered Kenjutsu
    Note: Must be taught by Mathias

    (Kenjutsu Yori za Mizu Megami: Kan Gen'ei Dansu: Niji Mira-ju) - Sword Arts of the Water Goddess: First Illusionary Dance - Rainbow Mirage
    Rank: S
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will swing the sword upwards in an arc manner, by doing this, he will control the water molecules where the sword swang, refracting the light and separating natural light in which you could call a rainbow, which can only be seen by the opponent's perspective. The user will finish off the swing as the hands of a clock, starting from 9 and finishing off in the same place (no matter if the user is right handed or left handed). By doing this, water molecules will slightly bend the light which the opponent perceives, making the user "dissapear", though the user will still maintain it's original position. The user will furter control the water molecules, bending the light in such manner that will create mirage of the user, which can extend to an amount of 4 copies, which spread up to 180 degrees from the opponents perspective, this is because of how the light is being received. The enemy will not be able to identify the original, unless with dojutsu. These mirages cannot attack in any way possible, though they can create attacks that may seem real, though they are only mirages of the original user. The original user will make an attack from any angle from 0-180, and the other mirages will attack the same way, toward the enemy. The user will swing the sword horizontally, and as he does it, he will control the water molecules in the air, creating a thin, though sharp wave that connects with the other unexistencial waves from the mirages, creating a much more bigger wave, only the area in which the original is situated will create real damage. Depending on the angle of the swing, the water is able to reflect certain amount of light, and if the user is skilled enough, the light can reflect into the enemy's eyes, blinding them as the wave comes at them.

    Note: Can only be used twice per battle
    Note: Must have mastered Water
    Note: Must have mastered Kenjutsu
    Note: No water techniques above A-rank for two turns after use.
    Note: Must be taught by Mathias

    ~All Pending~ As discussed, since those customs use the patented techniques of the Gyojin clan, I do not possess the authority to check them. Furthermore, they are to be submitted in the appropriate section for clan customs.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Nagato.. View Post
    The Prayers of Hades | Hadesu No Inori
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 95
    Damage: N/A -60 [Strain To The User]
    Descripton: Having mastered earth element the user performs a string of 10 handseals while concentrating a large portion of their chakra into the earth below the target(s) vicinity. Upon finishing, there is a 5 second delay in which it seems nothing has been done but the ground deep underneath the opponent is eroding from within at an alarming rate causing the vicinity in which the chakra was inserted to collapse creating a massive sinkhole to form which is said to be so deep that you can hear the God of the underworld, Hades screaming in prayer to Zeus to be freed from his eternal prison. Although its not a genjutsu the sudden shock of the ground from beneath the opponent(s) feet collapsing at such an alarming rate causes them to be put in a genjutsu like state similar to "Killing intent", where the constant force of the wind from free falling whistles in their ears giving the illusion that someone is screaming from below.

    Note: Takes one turn to prepare.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: Must have mastered Earth
    Note: Must be of at least Kage Ranked
    Note: No other Earth techniques for 4 Turns including this one.
    Note: Can also be used to form a blue hole, if the user is touching the ground near a body of water.
    Note: Can only be used by Nagato..


    The size of the sinkhole formed



    ~All Declined~ I will not accept any jutsu that use font, size change, aligned/centered text or spoilers for anything else then pictures. Re-submit in a more readable way.
    Thank you.

    Note: I've checked it nonetheless so here's my verdict. Take out the genjutsu and add physical damages so it can legitimately be ranked "Forbidden".
    The Prayers of Hades | Hadesu No Inori
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: Forbidden
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 95
    Damage: N/A -60 [Strain To The User]
    Descripton: Having mastered earth element the user performs a string of 10 handseals while concentrating a large portion of their chakra into the earth below the target(s) vicinity. Upon finishing, there is a 5 second delay in which it seems nothing has been done but the ground deep underneath the opponent is eroding from within at an alarming rate causing the vicinity in which the chakra was inserted to collapse creating a massive sinkhole to form which is said to be so deep that you can hear the God of the underworld, Hades screaming in prayer to Zeus to be freed from his eternal prison. The sudden bare shock of the ground collapsing from beneath the opponent(s) feet at such an alarming rate causes them to panic and become disoriented while they are free falling to the depths of the sinkhole. The pressure from the wind makes near impossible to breath (inhale, if youve ever stuck your head out of a car you would know this sensation), as well as if falling for too long, the g-forces will have their effect on the target causing the limbs to be dislocated at the joints and bones possibly snap, including the neck if falling for too long.

    Note: Takes one turn to prepare.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle.
    Note: Must have mastered Earth
    Note: Must be of at least Kage Ranked
    Note: No other Earth techniques for 4 Turns including this one.
    Note: Joints begin to dislocate after 2 turns of free falling.
    Note: Can also be used to form a blue hole, if the user is touching the ground near a body of water.
    Note: Can only be used by Nagato..


    The size of the sinkhole formed


    ~Declined~ All the bold part (which you put in bold) is simply stupid IMO. You mean to tell me that people doing skydiving can't breath and ends up with dislocated limbs?

    Phantom Star | Fantomusutā
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: In order for this technique to work, the user must have the targets attention for the simple fact that this technique works in which a manner that the opponent is typically anticipating an attack. The user will channel chakra throughout their body then rush towards the opponent with blazing speeds. The target will falsely believe that the target has made a swift hook towards them and react to either attack or defend, but it is merely a visual projection the user that has ran perfectly in place masking the actual user behind it. The actual user will then forcefully slam both of his hands with open palms directly into the targets upperbody and sending them flying uncontrollably.

    Note: Can only be used 3x per battle
    Note: Must have mastered taijutsu
    Note: Can only be taught by Nagato..



    ~Approved~ Took out the part where you break several ribs
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Raiton: Chisou Taishite Prometheus) Feast of Prometheus
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost:40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The user releases Raiton chakra much like in 16 Pillar bind but instead of forming multiple pillars he forms just one behind the opponent. From this pillar sprouts out chains made of the same material as the pillar itself they wrap around the opponent's arms, legs, waist, and neck holding him firmly in place. Once bound to the pillar/stake he is violently shocked for about 15 seconds with a current of electricity. The shock is enough to stun the opponent and paralyze parts of his body but not enough to kill him. The chains also restrict the persons movement making it so he can't place his hands together to form hand seals. Once he is firmly bound in place and the current has subsided a bird summon will swoop in and begin to dig into the persons belly he is aiming to eat the person's liver in the most gruesome of ways while the opponent is forced to watch. The bird continues the process starting with the liver once finished he moves on to the stomach then the lungs and finally the heart if the opponent hasn't made an escape yet the bird moves it's way up to his head and begins to peck at his eyes going for the brain the summon will then begin to devour the brain little by little.
    Note:
    -Once the electric current Subsides the user's part in the jutsu is finished and he is able to attack further.
    -Can only be used once per battle
    -Must have a bird summon on the field at the time of the jutsu, Jutsu does not summon the bird for you.
    -Must be the only Raiton jutsu used this turn by the user of the jutsu
    -Must know 16 Pillar Bind and have mastered Raiton Release to use

    ~Declined~ We never accept techniques that graphically elaborates how they kill their opponents. In fact, if your description explicitly states that it kills the opponent you're sure it'll be declined. Re-word the description.

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    (Kchuysei: Tako Artemis) Summoning: Artemis
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb drawing blood he then opens his hands wide and summons Artemis. she is the younger sister of Apollo. She is very mature and understanding toward all things both battle ready and non battle ready. She has on both Talons a sharp metal cleat type apparatus which can be used to do a considerable amount of damage she can channel her Katon nature into them giving them a massive cutting ability and burning. She is to small to carry anyone on her back but she makes up for her inability by being a keen fighter. She can use any katon jutsu up to A rank that the user knows as they have trained together for a long time working together on timing and jutsu. Together Apollo and Artemis make one of the best Kite summoning combos Apollo able to use Wind that powers up his sisters fire making for devastating combo attacks. She has a sharp sense of both sound and sight but has the ability to tune out unnecessary noise. She can easily spot an opponent from a range away. Around one of her Talons she has a band that has the Heno Heno Moheji as a way to show that she is a favorite summon of my Kakashi bio.
    -Can speak English
    -Can only be in play for 5-turns.
    -Can only be Summoned by someone with the Kite Contract.
    -Any Jutsu used counts to the three jutsu
    -Channeling of Katon nature counts as a jutsu
    -Can only be Summoned once per battle.

    ~Approved~
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    (Kchuysei: Tako Aporo) Summoning: Apollo
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb drawing blood he then claps his hands and summons Apollo. Apollo is a White-tailed Kite he is large enough to carry one person on his back and can fly at fast speeds with a rider. He is the only brother of another Kite named Artemis he and his sister Artemis were born from the same mother the same day and are twins. Apollo is a few minutes older than Artemis but it doesn't show much he has a immature personality in stark contrast to his sister who has a mature personality understanding of nature as well as her brother's lack of maturity. Apollo has trained with the summoner and has learned all he can in his affinity for Fuuton he can use any Fuuton jutsu the user knows up to S rank. His beak and talons are razor sharp and can clutch onto prey. His Talons are large enough to hold a human and strong enough to break bones like twigs. He can screech at an incredibly high pitch by using his Fuuton chakra to aid in the screech. It is enough to deafen the opponent 1 turn and leave his ears ringing the next turn. Anyone on the field is effected even the summoner if he doesn't prepare by covering his ears. Around one of his Talons he has a band that has the Heno Heno Moheji as a way to show that he is a favorite summon of my Kakashi bio.
    Note:
    -Can speak English
    -Can only be in play for 5-turns.
    -Can only be Summoned by someone with the Kite Contract.
    -Any Jutsu used counts to the three jutsu
    -Can only be Summoned once per battle.
    -Screech counts as a jutsu, deafening lasts 1 turn, ear ringing last the following turn. User is sensitive to this to unless he blocks his ears in some way.

    Approved Kite Contract

    ~Declined~ Unless you were trained in Sound release, your summon will never be allowed to use sound techniques.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Twin demon swords: Tiburon & Elexorien
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: short-long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The two swords Tiburon and & Elexorin were secretly forged in ancient times also known as "Swords of the Ancients." The origin of the swords is unknown as to why the swords were forged. The blade of Tiburon is white and that of Elexorien is black. As both the swords were made from chakra absorbing material, they have one specific ability each.

    Tiburon

    Elexorien


    Tiburon's ability: "Cascada"
    Allows the user to channel his water chakra into the space of the blade. By doing this, he can take water from a surrounding source and launches a rushing surge of water at his enemy. The torrent of high pressure water is large enough to cover the entire of the mid range on a battle field. It also has deadly force and cutting power. This also increases the force that he can put behind an attack making his strength seem to drastically increase. With the aid of the users chakra, it can also gather surrounding moisture in the air instead of using a water source.
    Note:
    -The Cascada is equivalent to A-rank water jutsu.
    -Can be used 3 times.
    -Counts as one of the three justu per turn.
    -Cannot use any A-rank and above water jutsu in same turn.
    -Both the swords ability cannot be used in same turn.


    Elexorien's ability: "Ola Azul"
    Allows the user to channel his lightning chakra into the space of the blade. By doing so, the lightning chakra gets accumulated and is condensed, and then shoots a big spear of lightning. Also the user can channelise his chakra into the blade, which allows him to cuts through any elemental jutsu's of B-rank and below.
    Note:
    -Ola Azul is equivalent to A-rank lightning jutsu.
    -Can be used 3 times.
    -Counts as one of the three jutsu per turn.
    -Cannot use any A-rank and above lightning jutsu in same turn.
    -Both the swords ability cannot be used in same turn.


    ~Declined~ I haven't even read the second sword's description because the first one was already OP. Either you make it a 1 sword custom weapon and fix the abilities (you've stacked too many), or you drastically reduce the abilities of both sword and keep them.
    Twin demon swords: Tiburon & Elexorien
    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: short-long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage Points:80
    Description: The two swords Tiburon and & Elexorin were secretly forged in ancient times also known as "Swords of the Ancients." The origin of the swords is unknown as to why the swords were forged. The blade of Tiburon is white and that of Elexorien is black. As both the swords were made from chakra absorbing material, they have one specific ability each.

    Tiburon

    Elexorien


    Tiburon's ability: "Cascada"
    Allows the user to channel his water chakra into the space of the blade. By doing this, he can take water from a surrounding source and launches a rushing surge of water at his enemy. The torrent of high pressure water is large enough to cover the entire of the mid range on a battle field. It also has deadly force and cutting power. This also increases the force that he can put behind an attack making his strength seem to drastically increase. With the aid of the users chakra, it can also gather surrounding moisture in the air instead of using a water source.
    Note:
    -The Cascada is equivalent to A-rank water jutsu.
    -Can be used 3 times.
    -Counts as one of the three justu per turn.
    -Cannot use any A-rank and above water jutsu in same turn.
    -Both the swords ability cannot be used in same turn.


    Elexorien's ability: "Ola Azul"
    Allows the user to channel his lightning chakra into the space of the blade. By doing so, the lightning chakra gets accumulated and is condensed, and then shoots a big spear of lightning. Also the user can channelise his lightning chakra into the blade, which allows him to cuts through any jutsu(solid form) of B-rank and below.
    Note:
    -Ola Azul is equivalent to A-rank lightning jutsu.
    -Can be used 3 times.
    -Counts as one of the three jutsu per turn.
    -Cannot use any A-rank and above lightning jutsu in same turn.
    -Both the swords ability cannot be used in same turn.

    Note: I've removed all the additional abilities the sword had and made it one ablilty per sword.

    ~All Approved~ Please note that both your custom technique related to the sword actually exist in cannon form. So, before other complains that I've approved an element shooting weapon, be aware that this weapon is exactly the same as simply doing the technique.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Taurus, Za Yajuu Kokuou) Summoning Technique: Taurus, The Beast King
    Rank:S
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Attack points: 80
    Description: The user summons the great bull, Taurus, the boss of bulls, by wiping blood on the hand, performing the necessary handseals, and then touching their hand to the ground. He is 7 ft tall with incredible strength. He also has an Earth affinity, in which he is most proficient. Unlike other bulls, Taurus has hands. This gives him the ability to perform his own jutsus. He is able to perform A-rank earth jutsus and gives all earth jutsus S-Rank when performing a user/summon combo.
    Note: Can only be used 1x per battle.
    Note: Can only stay in battle for 4 turns.
    Note: Must have signed the bull contract.



    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Gekido, Kokuou Za Buru Pin) Summoning Technique: Gekido, King of the Bull Pin
    Rank: A
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user summons the great bull, Gekido, the bull trained by Taurus, by wiping blood on the hand, performing the necessary handseals, and then touching their hand to the ground. Gekido is about 5'10", weighing a little over a ton. This bull's size is equivalent to his abilities. This bull, unlike Taurus, has a Wind affinity. He can perform B-Rank Wind jutsus that don't require handseals, and gives all Wind jutsu A-Rank when performing a user/summon combo.
    Note: Can only be used 1x per battle
    Note:Can only stay in battle for 5 turns.
    Note: Must have signed the bull contract.



    ~Both Declined~ I need you to post the approved contract in a spoiler or in a quote when submitting submissions. I can't possibly remember who owns which contract.

    (Katon: Hitoshirenu Kitai) Fire Release: Unseen Gas
    Rank:A
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user creates a flammable gas in his body and releases it from his pores. This gas is undetectable unless the victim has a doujutsu. The gas then surrounds the victim while the user sets it a blaze, engulfing the victim in a huge explosions. If the user does not have a doujutsu, the user can't see the gas himself, being unable to set the gas on fire.
    Note: Can only be used by ILGOI and the people he teaches

    ~Declined~ This is either a CE or a poorly described fire technique. In either case, unknown gas can't be submitted unless you got it approved beforehand. Make it a CE.
    RESUBMITTING:

    Feel free to add or edit for approval:

    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Taurus, Za Yajuu Kokuou) Summoning Technique: Taurus, The Beast King
    Rank:S
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Attack points: 80
    Description: The user summons the great bull, Taurus, the boss of bulls, by wiping blood on the hand, performing the necessary handseals, and then touching their hand to the ground. He is 7 ft tall with incredible strength. He also has an Earth affinity, in which he is most proficient. Unlike other bulls, Taurus has hands. This gives him the ability to perform his own jutsus. He is able to perform A-rank earth jutsus and gives all earth jutsus S-Rank when performing a user/summon combo.
    Note: Can only be used 1x per battle.
    Note: Can only stay in battle for 4 turns.
    Note: Must have signed the bull contract.



    ~Declined~ Elaborate on the bold part and re-submit.

    (Kuchiyose no jutsu: Gekido, Kokuou Za Buru Pin) Summoning Technique: Gekido, King of the Bull Pin
    Rank: A
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage: 60
    Description: The user summons the great bull, Gekido, the bull trained by Taurus, by wiping blood on the hand, performing the necessary handseals, and then touching their hand to the ground. Gekido is about 5'10", weighing a little over a ton. This bull's size is equivalent to his abilities. This bull, unlike Taurus, has a Wind affinity. He can perform B-Rank Wind jutsus that don't require handseals, and gives all Wind jutsu A-Rank when performing a user/summon combo.
    Note: Can only be used 1x per battle
    Note:Can only stay in battle for 5 turns.
    Note: Must have signed the bull contract.





    ~Declined~ Same as above. Other then that both are fine.

    Didn't have approved contract in spoilers previously.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    Summoning Animal: Orca
    Basic Info: The killer whale (Orcinus orca), commonly referred to as the orca, and less commonly as the blackfish, is a toothed whale belonging to the oceanic dolphin family. Killer whales are found in all oceans, from the frigid Arctic and Antarctic regions to tropical seas. Killer whales as a species have a diverse diet, although individual populations often specialize in particular types of prey. Some feed exclusively on fish, while others hunt marine mammals such as sea lions, seals, walruses and even large whales. Killer whales are regarded as apex predators, lacking natural predators and preying on even large sharks.

    Scroll Owner: Rasnall
    Other Users who have signed contract: n/a
    Summoning Boss if existing: Awaiting summon approval
    Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Awaiting summon approval
    Approved
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    Orca Summon: (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Amatsu Kira-Kujira Hakabakashii ) – Summoning Technique: Imperial Killer Whale Hakabakashii

    Type: Offense
    Rank: B
    Range: n/a
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: N/A
    Hand Seals: Boar, Monkey, Snake, Palm On Ground
    Description: The user, having blood at the palm of both hands, forms the needed hand seals and slams their hands onto the ground. As the user forms the final handseal (snake) they also open their mouth and eject a large amount of water into the area. Hakabakashii is then summoned on the top of this wave (with the user riding Hakabakashii).
    Suiton: Bakusui Shōha) - Water Release: Exploding Water Colliding Wave

    Rank: B
    Type: Offensive, Supplementary
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra cost:20
    Damage points: 40
    Description: The user performs the snake hand seal and creates a large volume of water from their mouth spilling it toward the ground and lifting them up into the air. The user can also ride the wave, allowing him to travel at high speeds and attacking the enemy. The user can create a small ocean worth of water even in barren conditions and can use the water for additional techniques.

    Hakabakashii:




    (Ejecting the water is opinonal but to summon Hakabakashii without this the user needs to slam their hands down on a water source, at which time Hakabakashii will be directly under them.)
    Hakabakashii has the speed of kisame fused with Samahada under the water and the same resistance to attacks (again while under water). Hakabakashii has the same bite force of a Great white 1500lb which is more then enough to remove limbs if bitten. Hakabakashii can not form any hand seals so obviously can not perform any jutsus but can fire water from his mouth upto mid range. Hakabakashii can only survive two of the users turns without coming up for air (on the second turn must state he comes up to breath) and 2 turns out of water (end of the second turn he has not returned to water).

    ~Can only be taught by Rasnall
    ~Stays in the battle for 5 of the users turns
    ~Can not use any jutsu's
    ~Must be summoned into a water source
    Declined, edit the part about creating water source along with summoning the creature to having require a water source before hand
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    Orca Summon: (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Amatsu Kira-Kujira Hakabakashii ) – Summoning Technique: Imperial Killer Whale Hakabakashii

    Type: Offense
    Rank: B
    Range: n/a
    Chakra Cost: 25
    Damage Points: N/A
    Hand Seals: Boar, Monkey, Snake, Palm On Ground
    Description: The user, having blood at the palm of both hands, forms the needed hand seals and slams their hands onto an already created water source. Hakabakashii will then be summoned directly underneath the user. Hakabakashii has the speed of kisame fused with Samahada under the water and has the same bite force of a Great white 1500lb which is more then enough to remove limbs if bitten. Hakabakashii can not form any hand seals so obviously can not perform any jutsus but can shoot water from his mouth upto mid range (equal to a B rank projectile). Hakabakashii can only survive two of the users turns without coming up for air (on the second turn must state he comes up to breath) and 2 turns out of water (end of the second turn he has not returned to water).

    ~Can only be taught by Rasnall
    ~Stays in the battle for 5 of the users turns
    ~Can not use any jutsu's
    ~Must be summoned into a water source

    ~Approved~

    (as hidan has no jutsu except the S rank ninjutsu curse thing, I was hoping i could make some for him, staying true to the character. Anyhow feel feel to edit any parts :D")

    (Gai Senpuu) Scythe Whirlwind
    Type: Attack/Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: After Hidan extends his Scythe out on the cable, he inserts chakra into his arm and hand and starts to rotate on the spot. The Cable and the Scythe, rotating at such a speed, form a protective barrier around Hidan able to block any A-Rank or lower solid object projectile (Rocks, Spikes, Needles etc) If an enemy is caught within range of the rotation then they will be severally injured.
    ~Can only be used by Hidan with his Scythe and with my Permission.
    ~Can only be used 3 times per match.
    ~Does not fully stop a liquid or gas projectile but will reduce the damage taken.
    ~If the object thrown toward the user is extremely heavy or harder than the scythe itself, this technique won't be able to stop it.

    ~Approved~ added a restriction.

    (Gai Kazaguruma) Scythe Pinwheel
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 40
    Description: Using Hidans, Three Blade Scythe, the user throws the Scythe forward to extend the cable and then takes the cable in their right hand. Hidan will then send a small amount of Chakra into his arm and hand and then start to spin the Scythe at a 20 degree angle. The chakra focused into the arm and hand (along with Hidans already exceptional skills with a Scythe) will increase the speed of the rotation and will look like a prepeller grazing the top inch off the floor. If held directly above Hidans head the user will slowly start to be lifted off the ground. (Max height of 50 feet)
    ~Can only be used by Hidans and his Scythe and with my Permission
    ~Can only be used 3 times per match
    ~Using the Scythe to be lifted off the ground is not fast enough to dodge any projectile/jutsu/advance made by an opponent, used at mid or short range.
    ~Can be used to block projectiles such as shurikens/ kunais/ swords only

    ~Declined~ Because of the conservation of momentum, you'd never be able to leave the ground. The moment you'd feel lighter you'd start spinning on yourself, counterclockwise to the scythe.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Doton : Buraindosakana) - Earth Release : Blind Fishes
    Type : Supplementary
    Rank : A
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 30 (+20 if user sacrifices chakra for teammate)
    Damage points : N/A
    Description : Much more of an advanced version of the useful digging or merging underground techniques, this technique enables the user to merge and swim across the ground below with a teammate, if wanted to, so that both of them goes underground though the user will have to hold onto the person he wants to go underground with. Once underground, the user's hand will be unable to let go of the person he went underground with and will have to take him or her to wherever the user is going to. When this happens, whomever that is affected will be blind temporarily during the period they are underground due to the complete darkness underground. The user however is the only one that knows what happens as he this technique allows him to sense what happens on the surface similiar to how Hiding Like A Mole does too.

    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be performed five times per battle
    Note : Not necessary to bring a teammate along during this technique
    Note : The teammate will have to mold his own earth chakra around himself
    Note : Whomever is affected by the technique is blind for the period they are underground
    Note : No other technique apart from Earth Release may be used while this technique is active
    Note : User must sacrifice 20 more chakra points if his teammate doesn't want to use his own chakra

    ~Pending~ You keep saying "person he went underground with", can it apply to your opponent?
    Quote Originally Posted by -Yusuke- View Post
    RESUBMITTING :

    (Bijuu : Sabureoni toutatsu) - Tailed Beast Technique : Sand Demon's Arrival
    Type : Offensive / Supplementary
    Rank : S
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : When this technique is in play, sand that can be found around the field starts manifesting the shapes of ghouls made out of sand. This happens due to the presence of the Shukaku's bijuu chakra being exposed to the surrounding. These ghouls will attack anything that is a threat to the user. Despite being made out of sand, these ghouls travel very fast through the air by turning into sand particles and drifting through the air. The number of ghouls determines the size of each and every one of the ghoul. The more ghouls there are, the smaller they are. On average, ten sand ghouls would be the size of a regular human being, a single ghoul could be the size of the complete Shukaku.

    Note : Can only be used twice per battle
    Note : Must be in Incomplete Form at the least
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used by the Jinchuuriki of the Ichibi
    Note : Sand ghouls are unable of performing sand techniques
    Note : There can only be a maximum of ten sand ghouls present on the field
    Note : Sand ghouls can only be in play for at least three turns if not destroyed
    Note : Able to reform with nearby sand if hit by a physical form of attack or a part of it is destroyed

    ~Declined~ 10 sand ghouls that can reform without costing a move or chakra? That's OP. Either make it so they can't reform or make it so you summon 1-2 ghouls.

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    (Doton : Yochizaisan) - Earth Release : Property of the Earth
    Type : Offensive / Supplementary
    Rank : S
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user will slam both hands, widespreading his earth chakra throughout the entire battlefield, both behind and in front. The moment the user slams his hands onto the ground, the target(s) can consider themselves already in the clutches of this technique. Nothing will happen to them though but now, the earth will take the enemy as theirs slaves and will not free them for the period of this technique. The purpose of this technique is to prevent the enemy from taking air advantage or escaping by flying into the sky by having several earth hooks burst out of the ground and grapple them the moment they try to escape and pull them back down onto the earth, hurting them in the process. As long as the enemy doesn't try to take air advantage, no harm will be done to them up until the point till the technique wears off.

    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : This technique lasts for five of the user's turns
    Note : Can be released by performing the Snake handseal
    Note : No S-rank or above earth techniques can be used while active
    Note : No damage shall be done to the enemy as long as he doesn't take it into the air and stay on land

    ~Declined~ Great idea, but tell me, how will this jutsu make the difference between a Shinobi jumping to avoid a technique or attack, and a Shinobi trying to take flight (air advantage)? Please clarify in your re-submission.
    RESUBMITTING ALL IN QUOTE :

    Removed some of the 'and's and commas and stuff so that it isn't too misleading >_< I don't wanna trick people with words...

    (Doton : Yochizaisan) - Earth Release : Property of the Earth
    Type : Offensive / Supplementary
    Rank : S
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : The user will slam both hands, widespreading his earth chakra throughout the entire battlefield, both behind and in front. The moment the user slams his hands onto the ground, he can safely assume that his target(s)' are already within the clutches of his technique. Nothing will happen to them for now though. The purpose of this technique is to prevent the enemy from taking air advantage or escaping by flying into the sky by having several earth hooks burst out of the ground and grapple them the moment they try to jump/fly/other actions that involves going into the air and pull them back down onto the earth, hurting them in the process. As long as the enemy stays on the ground, no harm will be done to them up until the point till the technique wears off.

    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used three times per battle
    Note : This technique lasts for five of the user's turns
    Note : Can be released by performing the Snake handseal
    Note : No S-rank or above earth techniques can be used while active
    Note : The earth hooks will grapple all enemies affected by the technique if they try to even jump
    Note : No damage shall be done to the enemy as long as he doesn't take it into the air and stay on land

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ At first I liked the idea, but then I started thinking about all the possibilities in which this technique could go wrong...What would happen if I simply ran forward at high speed, hence touching the ground every 3-4 seconds (like they do in the anime when they jump from tree to tree). Or what would happen if I fall down a cliff? Too many possibilities and I won't have you enumerate them all in this technique.
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    (Bijuu : Sabureoni toutatsu) - Tailed Beast Technique : Sand Demon's Arrival
    Type : Offensive / Supplementary
    Rank : S
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 40
    Damage points : 80
    Description : When this technique is in play, sand that can be found around the field starts manifesting the shapes of ghouls made out of sand. This happens due to the presence of the Shukaku's bijuu chakra being exposed to the surrounding. These ghouls will attack anything that is a threat to the user. Despite being made out of sand, these ghouls travel very fast through the air by turning into sand particles and drifting through the air. The number of ghouls determines the size of each and every one of the ghoul. The more ghouls there are, the smaller they are. If a single sand ghoul is summoned, it can be the size of the Shukaku but if there are two, each will be half the size of the Shukaku.

    Note : Can only be used twice per battle
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be used by the Jinchuuriki of the Ichibi
    Note : Must be in Incomplete/Complete Form at the least
    Note : The sand ghouls cannot perform any techniques
    Note : Sand ghouls are unable of performing sand techniques
    Note : There can only be a maximum of 2 sand ghouls present on the field
    Note : Sand ghouls can only be in play for at least three turns if not destroyed
    Note : Sand ghouls can extend out parts of their body just like the chakra arms of bijuus
    Note : Able to reform with nearby sand if hit by a physical form of attack or a part of it is destroyed

    ~Declined~ OP. Summoning sand beings that can dematerialize and rematerialize at will to move faster around the field, and those beings can be as big as a Bijuu? No.

    (Doton : Buraindosakana) - Earth Release : Blind Fishes
    Type : Supplementary
    Rank : A
    Range : Short - Long
    Chakra cost : 30 (+20 if user sacrifices chakra for teammate)
    Damage points : N/A
    Description : Much more of an advanced version of the useful digging or merging underground techniques, this technique enables the user to merge and swim across the ground below with a teammate, if wanted to, so that both of them goes underground though the user will have to hold onto the person he wants to go underground with. Once underground, the user's hand will be unable to let go of the person he went underground with and will have to take him or her to wherever the user is going to. When this happens, whomever that is affected will be blind temporarily during the period they are underground due to the complete darkness underground. The user however is the only one that knows what happens as he this technique allows him to sense what happens on the surface similiar to how Hiding Like A Mole does too.

    Note : Cannot be used on enemies
    Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
    Note : Can only be performed three times per battle
    Note : Not necessary to bring a teammate along during this technique
    Note : The teammate will have to mold his own earth chakra around himself
    Note : Whomever is affected by the technique is blind for the period they are underground
    Note : No other technique apart from Earth Release may be used while this technique is active
    Note : User must sacrifice 20 more chakra points if his teammate doesn't want to use his own chakra

    ~Approved~ Made it 3 times a match.
     
         
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    summoning animal: Foxes
    scroll owner: ~depp~
    other users who have signed contract: N/a
    summoning boss if existing: N/a
    other summoning animals tied to contract: N/a

    ~pending~ i'm checking with the other mods if the fox summon already exist in the abyss of nb.

    (jakku)- jack
    type: Puppet
    rank: A
    range: Short-mid (mid for the projectiles)
    chakra cost: 30 (if summoned)
    damage points: N/a
    description: Jack is a rather small, pale puppet with four arms that wears a long black cloak that goes down to his knees, with orange hair. Jack has a dagger hidden under his cloak behind his back. Jack's boby is made of hardened wood, his torso which is hollowed out houses an abundence of different types of weapons, which by the puppetteers control will be released from the puppets body, the weapons are set on wires that will release and be sent flying at the opponent (smoke bombs, shuriken, kunai, senbon, premade kunai and shuriken with tags on them.). On each of jacks arms and legs are thin razor sharp blades that are built into the middle of his arms and legs.
    : Can only use one of the weapons in his chest per turn.
    : Can only be used by ~depp~, or given permission to use.


    note: not sure if i can allow someone to use my puppet, if not then ill delete that part of the restricions.

    ~pending~ those are great, and i like the attention to the details, but where are the restrictions for each of those puppets? The first one can release a fire blast if i read correctly, what's the range of the attack?
    Just a reminder about the Fox Contract.

    ~Check back in the post you quoted, I approved the contract~

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    (Jakku)- Jack
    Type: Puppet
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-mid (mid for the projectiles)
    Chakra cost: 30 (if summoned)
    Damage points: N/a
    Description: Jack is a rather small, pale puppet with four arms that wears a long black cloak that goes down to his knees, with orange hair. Jack has a dagger hidden under his cloak behind his back. Jack's boby is made of hardened wood, his torso which is hollowed out houses an abundence of different types of weapons, which by the puppetteers control will be released from the puppets body, the weapons are set on wires that will release and be sent flying at the opponent (smoke bombs, shuriken, kunai, senbon, premade kunai and shuriken with tags on them.). On each of jacks arms and legs are thin razor sharp blades that are built into the middle of his arms and legs.
    : Can only use two of the weapons in his chest per turn.
    : After being summoned, the user can't use S-rank and above Ninjutsu for the following turn.
    : Jack's Weapons in his chest can only reach up to Mid range from Jacks body.
    : Can only be used by ~Depp~, or given permission to use.


    ~Approved~ Looks like I'll have to add restrictions myself. You do know that putting the range in the restriction isn't a restriction? There's a specific area for you to mention that info ~__~. I added a restriction.

    (Za Odokemono)- The Jester
    Type: Puppet
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30 (If summoned)
    Damage Points: n/a
    Description: The Jester is a purple & green, puppet made of a light metal, with many up grades, compared to most. His most noticable one would be his back which has an unatural curve in it, that also has holes through the back that can hold scrolls. The Jester has a tube through both arms, the left hand tube sprays powerful blasts of wind from the palm of the Jesters hand, while the right hand has another hose which spews fire from the palm of his right hand. In the Jesters throut are bundles of senbon which will shot out of the Jesters throut and spray the area infront of him (Much like a buck shot, doesnt spray past short range). On the Jesters lower back (just above the hips on the lower back) are short poles which will extend from the puppets body then will spring out into five blades that will spin on a rapid rotation at the puppeteers will, able to slice flesh from the opponent. The Jester has a blade hidden in both his feet, that extends from his foot outward another ft.
    : Blasts of Wind are only able to reach up to Mid range.
    : Hose that spews Fire can reach up to Mid range.
    : Only one of the arms hoses can be used per turn.
    : Senbon buck shot can only reach short range.


    ~Declined~ This is just a rip off of Sasori's main body. Hoses that shoots elements, blades that rotate on his lower back?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Katon- X-)~ Katon release: X-Burner
    Type: Offence
    Rank: S
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user will set his palms in opposite directions and send enormous amounts of fire chakra towards his palms, than when he collects enough chakra he will release the collected fire to send it towards the opponent in its full power
    Restrictions:
    - Can be used 2 times per battle
    - In the turn in which you used this jutsu you cant use other fire jutsus
    - no S rank in the same turn this jutsu wa used



    ~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist. You just added the part about shooting backward to stay stationary (which doesn't make sense btw as you'd need an equally strong jet of fire to keep you static).

    (Kuchiyose: Howaido Mantoru) ~ Summoning: White Cloak
    Type: Offence/Defence/Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: A
    Damage: N/A
    Description: The user does the preparations for the summoning jutsu and than he summons a small and young white lion from their valley. His name is Mantoru and he has a fire affinity so he can use B and below rank fire jutsus without handseals. He has also a special ability which allows him to transform into a cloak which the summoner can wear, the cloak protects the user from B-rank and below fire jutsus up to twice per battle, he can transform in that special form only once per battle.
    Restrictions:
    - Can be summoned twice per battle
    - User cant use any S rank and higher jutsu in the turn in which he summoned mantoru
    - Transforming into the cloak is counted as one of the 3 moves per turn






    ~Declined~ You need to provide the link to your approved contract for me to accept your custom summons.



    (Katon- Oshi Appu) Fire release: Push up
    Type: Suplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: N/A
    Chakra: 25(+ 10 per turn to keep active)
    Damage: N/A
    Description:
    This is a jutsu in which the user concentrates a decent amount of fore chakra in his palms od feet, and puts them in one direction, while holding both of his palms or feet he releases the collected chakra so that it throws him up in one direction. If the user keeps the jutsu active he is able to fly like that.
    Restrictions :
    - Usable twice per battle
    - Can be kept active for 3 turns max
    - While this jutsu is used the user can't use any forbidden ranked jutsus

    ~Declined~ A very similar technique already exist, though it doesn't allow you to fly (which I wouldn't have approved anyway).
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Siuton:tate of za siuton baburu
    Wind:shield of the wind bubble
    type:defence
    rank:C
    range:short range

    chakra cost:15
    damage cost:N/A
    description:the user makes 2 handseals and spins 2 times while his/her arms are wide open and its full of wind chakra..after that a ball of spining wind starts to cover the users body and it can protect the user from kunai, shirukens,explosive kunais and any small throwing things..etc..
    *can use 6 times .because its a simple jutsu
    *can only be taught by yanto.
    *if a B,A rank fire jutsu is hit on the bubble while the bubble is made
    20 damages will be cost to the bubble maker.

    ~Declined~ Please read the first post of this thread in order to learn how to properly set up a custom jutsu. Your submission isn't following the proper template.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Bolt View Post
    (Raiton: Dendou Ame) - Lightning Release: Electric Rain
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Type: Offense
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60 (+1 for each drop)
    Description: When using the technique "Rain at Will Tiger", simultaneously the user concentrates on rain and adds raiton chakra in rain to make it lightning infused with water, which gives small bolts to opponent when hit.
    Note: ~User is immune to this tech because it is his lightning chakra only.
    ~When lightning is added to the rain, it becomes lightning-water combo.
    ~Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.

    ~Declined~ What stops it from harming the user?
    (Raiton: Dendou Ame) - Lightning Release: Electric Rain
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Type: Offense
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60 (+1 for each drop)
    Description: When using the technique "Rain at Will Tiger", simultaneously the user concentrates on rain and adds raiton chakra in rain to make it lightning infused with water, which gives small bolts to opponent when hit.
    Note: ~User is immune to this tech because it is his lightning chakra only which is present in rain.
    ~When lightning is added to the rain, it becomes lightning-water combo.
    ~Can only be used 2 times per battle.
    ~Can only be taught by Bolt.

    ~Declined~ Unless you've been trained in Yin Yang you can't mold two chakra at once.

    Quote Originally Posted by Bolt View Post
    (Tetsu Jin) - Iron Man
    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60(or XX) [-20 to user]
    Description: When falling from 20m of above height user releases wind chakra from his feets while facing downwards, so that he start falling with great speed. And then he makes his whole body just like steel by passing earth chakra, and then he crashes on his enemy, crushing his most of the bones and leaving 2m wide and 2m deep crater.
    Note: -Beacuse of such great speed, any tecnique used on him will give only 50% damage to him and user will continue his falling with same speed by cutting through it.
    -Can only be used 4 times per battle.
    -Can only be taugh by Bolt.

    ~Declined~ Not only does it count as two techniques, but the wind technique you're using to increase your speed already exist.
    About using 2 techs, this is a combo, and i've seen many cjs which uses 2 chakras in one cj, and you can take a look at the S-rank fire cannon techs, there is a tech named "wind and fire blast technique" which uses 2 techs but still only counts as one jutsu.

    (Tetsu Jin) - Iron Man
    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60(or XX) [-20 to user]
    Description: When falling from 20m of above height user focuses his wind chakra on his head part while facing downwards, and thus creating a cone of wind, so that he start falling with great speed by cutting the air. And then he makes his whole body just like steel by passing earth chakra, and then he crashes on his enemy, crushing his most of the bones and leaving 2m wide and 2m deep crater.
    Note: -Beacuse of such great speed, any tecnique used on him will give only 50% damage to him and user will continue his falling with same speed by cutting through it.
    -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    -Can only be taugh by Bolt.

    ~Declined~ I know of that technique, and it was originally done by Kakuzu who could split his body into several monsters, what does it tell you on the technique ? Again, this technique will count as two moves. You need to precise that you first use the wind and then use the earth seperatly (hence you don't have the air cone on your head). If you've undergone Yin Yang training you can forget what I just said.

    (Fuuton: Su-pa Janpu) - Wind style: Super Jump
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Long
    Type: Supplementary
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: While bending the legs at an angle, user contrates a huge amount of wind chakra in his legs, and then releases it, resulting in a super jump upto 20m height in an instant in any direction the user wants.
    This technique can also be used to jump from short to mid or from mid to long range and vice versa.
    Note: Can only be taught by Bolt.
    Note: Can only be used 4 times per match.
    (Fuuton: Ooki Janpu) - Wind style: Mega Jump
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: Advanced version of "Super Jump", in which user concentartes a very giant amount of wind chakra in his legs While bending them at an angle, and then releases it, resulting in a mega jump upto 40m height, in any direction the user wants.
    This technique can also be used to jump from short to long or from long to short range as it is very advanced.
    Note: Must know "(Fuuton: Su-pa Janpu) - Wind style: Super Jump" to use this technique.
    Note: Can only be taught by Bolt.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per match.

    ~Pending~ I'm putting this on hold simply because there are various techniques that are similar to the original. I might have made a mistake in accepting the first one, so I'll try and limit the damages.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Quote Originally Posted by Strawberry View Post
    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Mizuryuu za Batto) - Summoning Technique: Mizuryuu The Bat
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb and wipes blood over a tattoo placed on the back of his hand and slams his hands on the ground or in mid air to call forth the legendary Mizuryuu, the female water bat is a average sized bat and is able to carry two people on her back, she is slightly larger than, gamatatsu and what makes her special then other bats is her fur, she has no fur at all leaving her naked with out fur but it gives this bat the unique ability to turn her body to water when hit by a solid object a object that could harm her. Mizuryuu has the manipulation of the Water affinity, therefore she can turn her wings razor sharp by manupulating the water, with her suiton chakra so she is able to slice like butter trew steel. From her birth she was training to master the water element and becomes more accustomed to it, therefore she can use the Water element up to S-rank techniques without the use of handseals in order to perform the Water techniques, she is very unique type of bat amongst all the bats as mentioned earlyer and Mizuryuu can be very friendly bat as well.

    ♦ Note: Can only be summoned twice per battle.
    ♦ Note: Mizuryuu can stay on the field for 5 turns per battle.
    ♦ Note: The user must have signed the bat contract.
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by the holder of the bat contract.
    ♦ Note: The user must have mastered the Water element inorder to summon Mizuryuu.
    ♦ Note: The user must be Kage rank or above to summon Mizuryuu.
    Declined, if you want this approved then make the following edits, firstly the ability to turn to water when attacked is the water substitution technique and therefore is limited to the substitution so make that apparent if you want the technique, then the water that is razor sharp cannot cut through steel water concentrated doesnt have that capability at best it would be able to cut through at least B rank earth techniques not steel and as for using water element without handseals no, you must perform the hand seals for the techniques requiring them
    Resubmiting

    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Mizuryuu za Batto) - Summoning Technique: Mizuryuu The Bat
    Type: Summoning
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A
    Description: The user bites his thumb and wipes blood over a tattoo placed on the back of his hand and slams his hands on the ground or in mid air to call forth the legendary Mizuryuu, the female water bat is a average sized bat and is able to carry two people on her back, she is slightly larger than, gamatatsu and what makes her special then other bats is her fur, she has no fur at all leaving her naked with out fur but it gives this bat the unique ability to see in a mist being a bat. Mizuryuu has the manipulation of the Water affinity, therefore she can turn her wings razor sharp by manupulating the water, with her suiton chakra so she is able to slice like butter trew B-Ranked earth. From her birth she was training to master the water element and becomes more accustomed to it, therefore she can use the Water element up to S-rank techniques so the user has to perform the handseals in order to perform the Water techniques, she is very unique type of bat amongst all the bats as mentioned earlyer and Mizuryuu can be very friendly bat as well.

    ♦ Note: Can only be summoned once per battle.
    ♦ Note: Mizuryuu can stay on the field for 5 turns per battle.
    ♦ Note: The user must have signed the bat contract.
    ♦ Note: Every technique used by the summon counts toward the user's 3 moves per turn.
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by the holder of the bat contract.
    ♦ Note: The user must have mastered the Water element inorder to summon Mizuryuu.
    ♦ Note: The user must be Kage rank or above to summon Mizuryuu.

    ~Approved~ Added a restriction.

    Quote Originally Posted by Strawberry View Post
    (Fūton: Tenryuu no Hõukou) - Wind Style: Swirling Wind Roar
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: After Performing the dragon, handseal the user takes in a deep breath, as they bring about the ideals of most wind exhaling jutsu into play. And as they inhale a large amount of air into there lungs and concentrating there fuuton chakra into the inhaled air and the lungs the user will then quickly form the dragon handseal and releases a Roar made out of wind and direct it at the opponent in a "V" pattern making it extremely difficult to avoid. It will take a swirling wind/vortex form with small wind blades in it roatating at high speed. It can cut deep into the opponents, flesh and even trew bones. It can also be used on multiple opponents.



    ♦ Note: Can only be used three, times per battle.
    ♦ Note: The user must have, mastered wind.
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by Ichigo.
    Declined, im going to need better restrictions than this for S rank
    Resubmiting

    (Fūton: Tenryuu no Hõukou) - Wind Style: Swirling Wind Roar
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage: 80
    Description: After Performing the dragon, handseal the user takes in a deep breath, as they bring about the ideals of most wind exhaling jutsu into play. And as they inhale a large amount of air into there lungs and concentrating there fuuton chakra into the inhaled air and the lungs the user will then quickly form the dragon handseal and releases a Roar made out of wind and direct it at the opponent in a "V" pattern making it extremely difficult to avoid. It will take a swirling wind/vortex form with small wind blades in it roatating at high speed. It can cut deep into the opponents, flesh and even trew bones. It can also be used on multiple opponents.

    An Example of Tenryuu no Houkou:
    ♦ Note: Can only be used three, times per battle.
    ♦ Note: The user must have, mastered wind.
    ♦ Note: The user can't use any wind technique's for the next turn.
    ♦ Note: The user must be Kage rank or above to use this technique (due to the scale of this attack).
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by Stawberry.

    ~Approved~

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    (Yōton: Maguma Gia) - Lava Release: Mamgma Gear
    Rank: C
    Type: Offensive/Suplementary
    Range: Short/Mid
    Chakra cost: 20
    Damage points: N/A
    Description: The user focuses a certain amount of yōton chakra through his whole body and forming the 'Ox' hand seal allowing him/her to cover and surround any of their body part with lava (the user must have activated lava skin before hand) and by manipulating the lava the user can change the form of the lava to anything he can make spikes appear through the body it can be used as defense and use it to attack the enemy. It can also be used create a wepon examples: Shurikens, Kunais, swords etc.

    ♦ Note: The user must have mastered Fire & Earth to use this technique.
    ♦ Note: Can only be taught by Strawberry.
    ♦ Note: Can only be used if mamgma skin is activated.
    ♦ Note: Can only be used trice per battle.

    Feel free to edit to get it approved ^^

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Fire release : Exploding Flame Blade | Katon :Bakuretsu Honoo Katana No Jutsu
    Type: Attack
    Rank: S
    Range: Short- Long
    Chakra cost: 40
    Damage points: 80
    Description : User ignites his/her arms and generates long torrents of flames from them, which move to hit the enemy in a spiraling formation. Each connecting strike seems to generate a powerful, the user can or attack the opponent with it so it milts his skin , or he can uses it as ropes to tide the opponent with it , melting all of his body
    - Can only be used 3 times
    - Can't use any katon jutsu at the same turn
    - Can't use higher than A rank katon technique on the next turn
    - Must be Sannin ranked or above


    ~Declined~ Your technique seemed ok up until I read the bold part. I don't usually pick on grammar and syntax, but I honestly couldn't understand what you wrote. Re-submit with proper description.
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    (Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Raikou ) Summoning No Jutsu: Pikachu
    Rank: S
    Type: Summoning
    Range: Short range
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: N/A [ + 10 to any lightning attack ]
    Description: Pikachu has short, yellow fur with brown stripes on the back, red cheeks that can produce small jolts of electricity, a mouth that looks like a sideways three, black-tipped ears, along with an unusually shaped tail, Pikachu has acute senses of hearing, thanks to its large ears. Most domestic Pikachu are able to understand and interpret human speech at levels far surpassing those of any pet dog , long time ago when he was a little kitten , his owner tough him how to control the bolts that comes from his cheeks so he can't make any lightning attack without technique , however he is capable to give the user 10 boost to every lightning attack , and the user as long as pikachu stands on his head , the user may make lightning attack with less 4 hand seals , also due to his ears and his hearing strength , he is able to hear any thing that walks on the ground which helps the user to know where is his opponent , also Pikachu can stand on the user's head even if the user move or fly .
    - Lasts on the battle 5 turns
    - Can't use any lightning attack without a technique
    - Can only be taught by -Kamishiro-
    - Can't hear/sense the opponent while the opponent merged with the ground or flying
    - Must sign the cats summoning contract .


    ~Declined~ First of all, you're overextending your summons ability to hear. He's not a sound specialist so take it all out. You're allowed to have a summon with good hearing, but this one is actually ripping off Mugi's inner sonar skills. Your summon can only use up to S-rank. Make it +5 when standing on top of you and only for jutsu up to S-rank.
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    Water Release : Cutting Water | Suiton : Sashiki Mizu No Jutsu
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Mid
    Chakra Cost: 40
    Damage Points: 80
    Description: The user charges his hand with water chakra , forming the water into slicing waves , then the user aim the waves of water towards is opponent . slicing the opponent . This techniques capable to slice solid rocks too.
    - Can only be used 4 time per turn
    - Can't use any water technique at the same turn
    - Must be Sannin ranked or above


    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Suiton: Mizu Toripuruhoīru) Water Release:Water Triple Wheel
    Type: Attack
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User creates three wheels which is hidden by using the shadow of other like Sasuke did when using Demon Wind Shuriken, or they can be launch from any direction. The user can redirect them in mid-way. The Water in the Wheel is greatly condensed so that it can crush people. When the wheel hit the target, it transform into a gush of water or roll out of it.
    Notes:
    - Can only be used two times in a battle
    - Requires a Water Source
    - The Three Wheel all together is B-rank which means each of them is C-rank and only combined power will be B-rank.
    - Each of them is of the half the size as this


    (Suiton: Mizu Iwa) Water Release: Water Rock
    Type: Defense
    Rank: B
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user make some hand seals and then make a palm on the ground which release multiple Water Rock around him up to mid-range.
    Notes: These rocks are of various size and each can block up to B-rank attacks. The user after making, send more chakra making the water hardened like a rock. The user can also use this to make a single larger rock but it is limited to short-range and when done a single, it can protect up to A-rank. Due to that it is created many rocks at once, the user exhaust from it but can block multiple attacks.
    Notes
    - Can only be used twice in a battle
    - The user cannot use B-rank and higher water tech for next 2 turns
    - Must be used on Water Source

    Declined incorrect chakra costs
    (Suiton: Mizu Toripuruhoīru) Water Release:Water Triple Wheel
    Type: Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: User creates three wheels which is hidden by using the shadow of other like Sasuke did when using Demon Wind Shuriken, or they can be launch from any direction. The user can redirect them in mid-way. The Water in the Wheel is greatly condensed so that it can crush people. When the wheel hit the target, it transform into a gush of water or roll out of it.
    Notes:
    - Can only be used two times in a battle
    - Requires a Water Source
    - The Three Wheel all together is A-rank which means each of them is B-rank and only combined power will be A-rank.
    - Each of them is of the half the size as this


    ~Declined~ While I like the general idea, there's no way you can hide such big wheels in the shadow of the first one. The idea with the Windmill shuriken is that it was flying a little bit lower then the first one, however your wheels are bound to be at the same height and in a line. It simply doesn't work.

    (Suiton: Mizu Iwa) Water Release: Water Rock
    Type: Defense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: The user make some hand seals and then make a palm on the ground which release multiple Water Rock around him up to mid-range.

    Notes: These rocks are of various size and each can block up to B-rank attacks. The user after making, send more chakra making the water hardened like a rock. The user can also use this to make a single larger rock but it is limited to short-range but when done a single, it can protect very wide attacks.
    - Can only be used once in a battle
    - The user cannot use A-rank and higher water tech for next 2 turns
    - Must be used on Water Source

    ~Declined~ First of all, calling them rocks doesn't change the fact that they'll be round projectiles and we already have several jutsu for that. Secondly, you didn't precise the amount of projectiles, which is unacceptable since you could say you fired a thousand B-rank bullets. The more you have, the lower the rank of each water bullet.

    Quote Originally Posted by Nara.. View Post
    (Suiton: Kage Mizu Bakudan) Water Release: Shadow Water Bomb
    Type: Attack
    Rank: C
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 20
    Damage Points: 30
    Description:User creates a ball of water in which his shadow chakra are molded in it, when the ball is released, and it is launched towards the enemy, the enemy takes some damage but if launched towards the shadow, the ball can summon the shadow chakra and control the target. When the water ball misses the enemy, the user can make it burst, raining some drops down each with shadow chakra in it, if the drops make contact with the target's shadow, shadow possession will occur.
    Notes
    - Can used by Nara members shared by Renges
    - The shadow possession occur if succeed
    - Can launch multiple balls
    - Based on "(Suiton No Jutsu) - Water technique" and "(Kage Mane Shuriken) - Shadow Imitation Shuriken"
    - The blast is not strong enough to throw an enemy away

    [COLOR="DarkRed"][I]~Declined~ I could've accepted it if the water ball made contact with the shadow, but making it so that the droplets can cause the shadow possession technique to occur is just overkill. You know what to
    (Suiton: Kage Mizu Bakudan) Water Release: Shadow Water Bomb
    Type: Offense
    Rank: A
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description:User creates a ball of water in which his shadow chakra are molded. When the ball is released, and it is launched towards the enemy, the enemy takes some damage but if launched towards the shadow, the ball can summon the shadow chakra and control the target. The user can launch it multiple time. Tactic is that the user can launch it to the body whilst he launch more at the shadow.
    Notes
    - The shadow possession occur if succeed
    - Can launch multiple balls
    - No A rank or higher water and shadow tech in next 2 turns
    - Can only be used thrice in battle.

    ~Declined~ Same as above: how many? In fact, for this technique, just make it one water ball. The only reason I'm considering accepting this one is because it's actually different from any water projectile that was ever submitted. Keep the core of this technique (your Shadow chakra hidden in the sphere) and just make it a simply attack toward your opponent.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    (Hyōton: Tōketsu Jigoku Furui) - Ice Release: Frozen Hell Of The Ancients
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: S
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 [+15 per turn to maintain it active]
    Damage Points: N/A [-10 to Fire Techniques, +10 to Ice Techniques]
    Description: After performing a set of handseals [Horse → Ram → Bird → Monkey] The user gathers a large amount of Hyōton chakra in the center core of his body as he releases it outwards through all of the user's pores throughout the whole battlefield the user drastically decreases the air's temperature throughout the battlefield using the proprieties of the Hyōton chakra to the point where the user and the opponent can see their breath clearly, this colder air causes the water to become really cold, and the wind techniques used through it will be contain very cold air instead of the regular ones, the wind technique's that are transparent in the regular cases won't be transparent anymore though it's the only effect that's related to the wind and water techniques, it doesn't change any proprieties of earth techniques but it has drastic changes to both the Ice and Fire elemental techniques, when a fire technique is used by either the user or the opponent, the cold hair gathers around the fire technique decreasing it's temperature and making it less powerful than it originally was, this takes out 10 damage points out of the user and the opponent's fire techniques, and this techniques relation to the Ice techniques is the complete opposite to the fire release techniques, whenever the user or the opponent utilize an Ice technique the cold air gathers around the Ice technique decreasing it's temperature even further and making any Ice technique more powerful and boosting it's power by +10 damage points, this technique has a major drawback to the user, as he has to constantly release Hyōton chakra throughout the battle and restricting the user to the usage of his elements, making him only use the the Ice release and the elements that the Ice release consists of which are the water and wind elements.
    Note: Can only be used once per battle
    Note: Lasts for 4 turns
    Note: Can only use Ice, Water and Wind elemental techniques while this technique is active.
    Note: The user is exhausted from the chakra overuse after the deactivation of this technique and cannot use any S-ranked or above Ice, Wind or Water release techniques for 2 turns.
    Note: The user is restricted to a normal walk rather than running due to the chakra overuse and the exhaustion of the user's body.

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.


    ‡Sode No Shirayuki - Sleeved White Snow‡

    Type: Weapon
    Rank: S
    Range: N/A
    Chakra Cost: N/A [+30 When using the Ice spikes]
    Damage Points: N/A [+10 To Ice release techniques]
    Description: Sode no Shirayoki or literally meaning Snow-white sleeves, Sode no Shirayuki is a long white Katana with a long white rippon that's attached to the back of it's handle, This is a special Katana forged in the the Yuki clan only to be used by Ice release users who were mostly associated with Ice release techniques, the Katana is made out of a special metal that utilizes the Ice release chakra, whenever the user injects Ice release chakra into the Katana, the Katana releases cold air around it that looks like a faint white transparent aura, allowing the user's Ice release techniques to gain more power, and helps the user perform Ice release techniques with one less handseal than it's normally used to perform Ice techniques and is performed faster than normal whenever the user is wielding the Katana in one of her hands, the second special ability is that the Katana uses the Ice as means to attack, to activated the second ability of the Katana the user concentrates +30 chakra to Sode no Shirayuki and points the tip of the Katana towards her target, releasing an enormous sized wave of Ice that's at the size of the Gold dust wave technique but with Ice instead of Gold dust this wave hits the opponent crushing them due to the pressure of the wave of Ice, the wave of Ice is equal to an A-ranked Ice release technique and is a long ranged technique.
    Note: The wave of Ice can only be used twice per battle.
    Note: The wave of Ice counts as one of the user's moves allowed per turn.
    Note: The wave of Ice can only be used once every two turns.
    Note: This Katana is indestructible however that doesn't mean it can cut through everything.[*]Sode no Shirayuki can only be used by an Ice release user bio.


    ~Declined~ I'm done accepting swords that are just copy cats. +10 to an element and 1 less hand seals? There's at least 50 swords that do the exact same thing. I mean why bother submitting a custom for such a sword, let's give one to everyone and it'll be settled lol.

    (Hyōton: Kōri Dōbutsu Sōshi) - Ice Release: Ice Animals Creation
    Type: Supplementary/Offensive/Defensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short - Long
    Chakra Cost: 40 [+10 to manipulate the animals movements]
    Damage Points: N/A [60 if used as an attack or defense]
    Description: This technique is an advanced Hyōton technique that's used like Sai's ink ninjutsu techniques but with the usage of the Hyōton chakra, by changing the moist in the air or adding Hyōton chakra to form transparent animals made out of the structures of the Ice release, the user can form the shape of various animals of Ice and have them to perform tasks like animals that crawl and wrap around the opponent binding them, flying animals that can be used to fly on top of it, large structured animals that can be used to defend from incoming attacks, or powerful animals that can cause blunt damage to the opponent. these animals are transparent and the user can see through them but not a clear vision, due to the Ice's structure the user's vision is distored when he's looking through them, the user is able to manipulate the animals movements through the usage of his chakra but he can't manipulate and change their shape once he finished forming them.
    Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
    Note: No Ice release techniques higher than A-rank for the next turn.

    ~Declined~ How many of those can you create with this technique? How long do they stay on the field?
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Name:Kyuouise No Justu:Karuku
    Rank:B
    Chakra:30
    Decription:The user smears their blood on their PUMA Tatoo and slams theyre palm on the ground while injecting a medium amount of chakra causing Kakuru the Puma to be summoned
    Karuku is about 5 ft tall from paw to shoulder and roughly 7 ft long from base shoulder to base tail he is extremely agile and due to his size can move at both great speeds and deal damaging blows to a enemy. Karuku can go from 0 to 27 Mph in less than three Bounds and can easily reach speeds of up to 47 Mph
    He has large hefty paws that could do great damage to an enemy and has rather large fangs that can always be seen whether or not his mouth is open or close
    He has a affinity to the fire nature and can preform fire technique's C rank and below with the user creating the handseals if needed.
    Once every two turns Karuku can Emit a Large fire ball from his mouth that is a equivaliant to a B rank fire attack
    Karuku can take Two B rank attacks before being sent back to Mount Fang

    ~Can only be used by signers of the Puma contract
    ~Can only be Taught and used by minato491
    ~Karuku Stays on the field for 4 turns before being sent back to Mount Rover
    ~Can be only used twice per match
    Declined, follow the template fully
    Resubmitting
    Kyuouise No Justu: (Karuku)
    Rank:a
    Type: offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage points:60
    description:The user smears their blood on their PUMA Tatoo and slams theyre palm on the ground while injecting a medium amount of chakra causing Kakuru the Puma to be summoned
    Karuku is about 5 ft tall from paw to shoulder and roughly 7 ft long from base shoulder to base tail he is extremely agile and due to his size can move at both great speeds and deal damaging blows to a enemy. Karuku can go from 0 to 27 Mph in less than three Bounds and can easily reach speeds of up to 47 Mph
    He has large hefty paws that could do great damage to an enemy and has rather large fangs that can always be seen whether or not his mouth is open or close
    He has a affinity to the fire nature and can preform fire technique's C rank and below with the user creating the handseals if needed.
    Once every two turns Karuku can Emit a Large fire ball from his mouth that is a equivaliant to a B rank fire attack

    ~Can only be used by signers of the Puma contract
    ~Every technique performed by Karuku counts toward the user's 3 moves per turn
    ~Can only be Taught and used by minato491
    ~Karuku Stays on the field for 4 turns before being sent back to Mount Rover
    ~Can be only used twice per match
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    ~Approved~ Made it short range (you can't summon an animal mid-range from you). Took out the part where he can withstand 2 B-rank, and added the bold part (restrictions).

    Kyuouise No Justu: Saritu
    Rank:a
    Type: offensive
    Range: Short
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage points:60
    description:The user smears their blood on their PUMA Tatoo and slams theyre palm on the ground while injecting a medium amount of chakra causing saritu the Puma Karuku's twin brother to be summoned.saritu is 5 ft tall from paw to shoulder and roughly 7 ft long from base shoulder to base tail he is extremely agile and due to his size can move at both great speeds and deal damaging blows to a enemy. saritu can go from 0 to 27 Mph in less than three Bounds and can easily reach speeds of up to 47 Mph.He has large hefty paws that could do great damage to an enemy and has rather large fangs that can always be seen whether or not his mouth is open or close.He has a affinity to the wind nature and can preform wind technique's C rank and below with the user creating the handseals if needed.
    Once every two turns Saritu can Emit a Large wind ball from his mouth that is a equivaliant to a B rank wind attack

    ~Can only be used by signers of the Puma contract
    ~Every jutsu used by Saritu counts toward the user's 3 moves per turn
    ~Can only be Taught and used by minato491
    ~saritu Stays on the field for 4 turns before being sent back to Mount Rover
    ~Can be only used twice per match

    ~Approved~ Same as above.

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    Aoi: (Blue)
    Rank:A
    Type: Weapon
    Range: Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage points:60
    description: This bow is one of the few lost bows in the ninja world . It is made out of a special iron and wood that makes it light weight.It comes with 40 arrows that are made with a special material that makes them able to withstand all chakra natures.The bow has blue black and white on it making it different from its brothers.

    ~Can only be used by minato491
    ~has to be jounin rank
    ~has to have training in 4 elements

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    ~Declined~ Since this bow does nothing out of the ordinary, you don't need to make a custom for it. You can simply add in your bio that you use a bow and that's the end of it. Also, when submitting a weapon, don't put damages unless it does something special.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

    Mizu youshiki : Mizu shindo oshi --Water Style:Water Depth Pressure
    Type:Attack
    Rank:Forbidden
    Range:Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost:50
    Chakra Damage:90
    Description: The User Does a set of 7 handseals (Ox>Rat>Bird>Dog>Rar>Monkey>Tiger) Follow after, A Huge amount of water will appear everywhere above the battle ground out of nowhere. Except where you are standing. Then the user does 1 more hand seal and the water comes crashing down on everything with great force. Now the Whole Arena is under (Except your small circle) following right after. The user does 1 more hand sign to increase the pressure of the water. The pressure is strong enough to Obliterate/Crush the Oppenent in mere seconds Due to Heavy pressure. (The Pressure is as Deep as 100miles Under the Ocean)

    -Note-Only Can use Once
    -Note-Cant Use Water Techs For the whole battle
    -Note-Due to using a Large amount of water. the user body takes about a 5second strain
    -Note-AM,Sadako, and Teno or whomever i give permission to can use this tech or own it

    ~Declined do not resubmit~ The description is a mess and the abilities are a big mash up of techniques that already exist.

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    Denkou shindo: kochou ibiru--Lightning Style:Butterfly Tease
    Rank:S
    Range:Mid-Long
    Chakra Cost:30
    Chakra Damage:60
    Description: The User does 2 hand signs, and by using shape manipulation the user creates butterfly's from their mouth Forge from Lightning Chakra. The butterfly's Once comes into contact with the opponent it explodes off an electrical surge. It can Only Explode when it comes in contact with something/Someone

    -Note-Can use twice
    -Note-Can only have up to 5 butterfly's
    -Note-Cant use any other lightning jutsus the same turn as this
    -Note-Only people i say can own/use this justsu

    ~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

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    Uindo shindo: kaze gyakuten--Wind Style :Wind Reversal
    Type:Attack/Defense
    Rank:S
    Range:Short
    Chakra Cost:40
    Chakra Damage: Half the damage the regular attack was
    Description: This Can only be active if a Lightning attack is coming towards you.. The user does 2 handseals. following after, the user controls the air around them to form somewhat of a shield around them them. then the user does 1 more handsign to repulse the wind to send the lightning attack back where it came from towards the oppenent.

    -Note-Can only be taught by whome i say
    -Note-Only can be used Once
    -Note-If blocking a forbidden attack it takes up 2/3 slots
    -Note-Cant use any wind attacks the same turn as this

    Take out anything you need to please

    ~Declined~ This technique just proves to me that you have no idea how lightning and elemental weaknesses work.
     
         
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    Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

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    (Doton: Yasumichuu Funkei)Earth style: enclosed Decapitation
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: This Jutsu can only be done on ground or where there is earth,the user make earth hand seals and focuses his chakra on hands and slamming palm to the ground bringing about 4 large enclosed rock pillars with Multiple sharp edges which quickly pierces the opponent heart and if not avoided other organs thus leading to decapitation and making the victim dead in few minutes. Can only be counter altered by a lIgh ning jutsu of a higher rank.
    Note:Can Be used twice in battle
    Note:The user must wait 3 turns to use again

    ~Declined~ Our system work with damage point, you can't say you'll kill your opponent with a technique (even if we understand that it can). Take out anything related to killing your opponent. Also, take out the part where it can ONLY be countered by high lightning, you don't know that for sure.

    (Raiton: Dendou Omoi Chisou )Lightning Style: Eletric Heart feast
    Rank:A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: This user draws a massive amount of lightning chakra in his palm similar to that of chidori which takes the shape of a large like chakra mass but allows different rotator movements and is aimed for the opponents chest which when hit paralyzes the opponent from breathing and pumping blood and living the opponent dead in minutes. This jutsu can only be counter-altered by a wind jutsu of such rank or higher.

    ~Declined~ Same as above, and where are the restrictions?

    ((Kurisutaru no sutairu: Mirā funsai))Crystal style: Mirror Shatter

    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points:80
    Description; Guren holds and focuses on her chakra and then in one stroke place her focused chakra palm on the ground bring up a huge hue enclosed wall made of crystalline with several mirrors to confuse his opponent and keep him from escaping she then send thousands of needle sharp crystalline into the wall tearing the opponent limb from limb the then she send a huge amount of heat blast through her palms to crush the wall and bring it falling down crushing the opponent to death. Its wall can not be penetrated by any A rank jutsu or lower, it can also be you used as a great defensive shield to protect against s rank jutsu or lower the guren does this simply by trapping herself in the wall which can defend against extreme temperature rain or humidity.
    Note: Can only be taught by thunderbolt
    Note: Can Be used once a battle

    ~Declined~ Same as above, also, re-read yourself because the description is a mess. Make it so it can defend from A-rank max, after which it will shatter (since this technique isn't only meant to be a defensive one). Lastly, if you're going to send a heat blast, I'm guessing you need to gather your fire chakra and hence this technique need to counts as 2 technique if you haven't mastered Yin Yang.
    Resubmitting

    (Doton: Yasumichuu Funkei)Earth style: enclosed Decapitation
    Rank: A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Short-Long
    Chakra Cost: 30
    Damage Points: 60
    Description: This Jutsu can only be done on ground or where there is earth,the user makes several earth hand seals and focuses his chakra on hands and slamming palm to the ground bringing about 4 large enclosed rock pillars with Multiple sharp edges which quickly when comes in contact with the target causes severe injuries

    In this jutsu as instructed by izuna i removed that parts of it being an auto kill and also removed stuff like can only be countered by a lightning jutsu of a higher rank i have done all of the conditions listed by izuna and have mad minor changes to my grammar

    ~Declined~ It's all good now, but where are the restrictions @__@?

    (Raiton: Dendou Omoi Chisou )Lightning Style: Eletric Heart feast
    Rank:A
    Type: Attack
    Range: Mid
    Chakra Cost:30
    Damage Points:60
    Description: This user draws a massive amount of lightning chakra in his palm similar to that of chidori which takes the shape of a large like chakra mass but allows different rotatory movements and is aimed for the opponents chest which when hit paralyzes the opponent Immediately rendering him helpless and near death.

    Note:Must Have started training in lightning to use this jutsu
    Note:Can only be used three times in a battle or fight
    Note:The user must wait to rounds or turns before using the jutsu again
    Note:Can only be taught be thunderbolt.


    In this jutsu i changed some part using the guide lines you earlier stated on damage points and then i removed the killing part and added more restrictions.

    ~Declined~ After re-reading the description, this technique just look like a mix between a chidori and a rasengan, which are banned for being done dozens of times.

    ((Kurisutaru no sutairu: Mirā funsai))Crystal style: Mirror Shatter

    Rank: S
    Type: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short-Mid
    Chakra cost:40
    Damage points:80
    Description; Guren holds and focuses on her chakra and then in one stroke place her focused chakra palm on the ground bring up a huge hue enclosed wall made of crystalline with several mirrors to confuse his opponent and keep him from escaping she then send thousands of needle sharp crystalline into the wall tearing the opponent limb from limb the then she send a huge amount of heat blast through her palms to crush the wall and bring it falling down crushing the opponent to death. Its wall can not be penetrated by any B or A rank jutsu, it can also be you used as a great defensive shield to protect against Attacks though it walls will be shattered if it comes in contact with any s rank techniques.Guren does this simply by trapping herself in the wall which can defend against extreme temperature rain or humidity.

    Note: Can only be taught by thunderbolt
    Note: Can Once once a battle
    Note:Must have a Guren Bio To use
    Note:It counts as two Moves since the user sends heat wave through the crystal which times is needed to do ,


    I made minor changes such as Added more restrictions and make it count as two turns or moves since a considerable amount of time is used to send the heat wave through the crystal thus the time is needed to gather enough fire chakra,i also made it to be able to defend at a rank max after which if it comes or encounter s rank jutsu it breaks

    ~Declined~ It seems to me as though you didn't do any real work on this one. Check the bold parts. You still mention death, it's still strong defensively (defending form an S-rank why being an offensive technique is exactly what I warned you about in your previous submission), and the description is still a mess. Honestly, what's happening in this technique? Are you surrounding yourself in crystal walls or are you trapping your opponent?
     
         
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