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    The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Chapter 4 Two Wills

    Inside Naruto's subconscious-

    Kurama: i'd advise you to try and end this quickly, Naruto. Our link will only allow us to be in this form for 20 minutes.

    Naruto : i know.

    Kurama: also dont forget about those black flames . If you touch it even slightly, the fight is over

    Naruto: right!

    Naruto creates 2 shadow clones . Both in bijuu mode

    The clones enlarge their chakra arms and charge at susanoo

    Sasuke : (so naive)

    Susanoo raises it's sword / large arrow and slashes at the clones. They quickly vanish in blinding speed.

    Sasuke: !!!

    Naruto's clones appear behind sasuke

    They each thrust their chakra fists into susanoo's back..

    Susanoo is pushed forward and a small opening is opened exposing it's spine

    Naruto: There!!

    Naruto's clones begin to run toward susanoo's back. Aiming for it's spine.

    Sasuke: Amaterasu!

    Amaterasu forms around the spine of susanoo.

    Not able to react in time, Naruto's clones get burned by amaterasu during their attack

    The clones are burning on the ground behind sasuke

    Sasuke: You're gonna have to do beter than that.. Naruto.

    Naruto: ....

    Sasuke forms 6 amaterasu projectiles out of susanoo's sword. They float above it's right hand

    Sasuke shoots three of them at Naruto in rapid succession.

    Naruto: (can't let those hit!!!)

    Naruto dodges all three with blinding speed

    Naruto : heheheh that wont be enough!

    Suddenly..all the projectiles that naruto dodged are shooting back toward him

    Naruto: ( what !!!)

    Naruto jumps in the air dodging them once again as they follow him.

    Naruto : Dammit!

    Naruto creates a chakra arm and grabs a nearby cliff .. pulling himself away from the assault.

    Naruto : (How is he doing that)

    Kurama: his amaterasu is not like any other ninjutsu. He can control the angle and projectary with his eyes! Dont lose focus!

    Naruto senses them coming toward the cliff...

    Naruto : !!!!

    Naruto : ( i have to get rid of those )

    Naruto creates three clones , they each use chakra arms to grab the projectiles . The flames quickly burst into an inferno and dispel the clones.

    Naruto releases the chakra arm hanging on to the cliff and drops back down to the water.

    Naruto: Thats some technique you've got there. But i wont be killed so easily

    Naruto: (i have to aim for the back of his susanoo... Thats the only way to create an opening. He has three of those amaterasu attacks left. I have to be careful)

    Naruto : !!!

    Naruto has a flashback to his fight with Madara alongside Gaara. He remembers how gaara was able to pull Madara from susanoo with an attack from under Madara's feet.

    Naruto: (maybe.....)

    Naruto creates three more clones

    The clones dash at sasuke with the intent to distract him

    Sasuke releases all three projectiles into each clone

    All three clones create a sheild with their chakra tails from their cloaks

    The attacks once agains bursts into a large black inferno on the tails causing a wall of black flames .

    After burning the clones away the black flames dissappear and naruto is no where to be found.

    Sasuke: !!!!

    Naruto quuickly grabs sasuke's foot from under the water with a chakra arm.

    Naruto: (Got Him!\

    Naruto pulss sasuke out of susano

    As susanoo fades, Naruto quickly tosses sasuke up from the water as Naruto jumps upward right under him

    Naruto forms kurama's head with his chakra shroud and begins to form a medium siized tailed beast bomb

    Naruto: (sasuke....... forgive me)

    Naruto shoots the tailed beast bomb upward at sasuke.

    Sasuke:.....

    The red of sasuke's sharingan begins to glow bright red

    Sasuke: Gensoku-ji !!!

    Naruto witnesses his tailed beast bomb fly in the sky as sasuke seemingly dissappered

    Naruto lands on top of the water only to see sasuke standing not too far away

    Naruto: What!!

    Sasuke: Dont underestimate my eyes..

    Naruto: ( what the hell did he just do?... )

    Sasuke: witness the power of the uchiha!!! Gensoku-ji !!!









    WHATS THIS?? A NEW POWER?

    Next Chapter: Gensoku-ji !!



    Link to previous chapter below
    http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=282100
     
         
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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Oh I enjoyed reading Your fan-fic Nicely Written
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    dam i love this lol
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

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    Oh I enjoyed reading Your fan-fic Nicely Written
    Thank you so much. Many more to come.
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    mind blown ....... Bro that was an AWESOME chapter :ice::ice::ice::ice:
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

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    dam i love this lol
    I told you sasuke would get his time to shine... I'm not gonna give the hero all the glory..lol
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

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    mind blown ....... Bro that was an AWESOME chapter :ice::ice::ice::ice:
    Thanks man.
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Finally lol i thought you forgot. Nice chapter. Looks like sharingan has yet another power.
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by spade3dg View Post
    Finally lol i thought you forgot. Nice chapter. Looks like sharingan has yet another power.
    . Thanks man.. I jus had some things to handle before writing this chapter... This is sasuke's time to shine!
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Beautiful as ever! Nicely done! Characters sound just fine!

    Only confusing part: the Naruto clones are in Kurama chakra mode yes?! Not the in Beast Mode (transformed into Kurama)?!! Only confused as you said two clones in Bijuu mode so it wounded like they were like tailed beasts.

    Osoi Jikan....too lazy to look up what it means, but it reminds me of Captain Yammamoto's bankai...the Jikan reminds me of the final part of his Shikai O.o
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    awesome
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by KGB Kakuzu View Post
    Beautiful as ever! Nicely done! Characters sound just fine!

    Only confusing part: the Naruto clones are in Kurama chakra mode yes?! Not the in Beast Mode (transformed into Kurama)?!! Only confused as you said two clones in Bijuu mode so it wounded like they were like tailed beasts.

    Osoi Jikan....too lazy to look up what it means, but it reminds me of Captain Yammamoto's bankai...the Jikan reminds me of the final part of his Shikai O.o
    Thanks man... Yea naruto was in bijuu mode...not the tailed beast form. Blocking with the tails was similar to how he did against madara's rods.... And sasuke's new attack is to be. A mystery until next chapter xD

    Edit: I mean bijuu as in with the cape but not the fully formed kurama cloak
     
         
    Last edited by Takeshi Uzumaki; 12-15-2012 at 05:53 PM.

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Awesome stuff! Your fanfic is the only reason I logged into the base. I dont know how the rep or like system works but I will try this lol

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

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    awesome
    Thanks bro
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

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    Awesome stuff! Your fanfic is the only reason I logged into the base. I dont know how the rep or like system works but I will try this lol

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    Thanks bro that really means a lot
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Your fanfic is awesome. You can become a good manga writer if you have one more drawing skill
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by November Nolove View Post
    Your fanfic is awesome. You can become a good manga writer if you have one more drawing skill
    Thanks man.. I do my best to keep. You guys interested.

    Edit: I can't draw to save my life..lol
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by KGB Kakuzu View Post
    Beautiful as ever! Nicely done! Characters sound just fine!

    Only confusing part: the Naruto clones are in Kurama chakra mode yes?! Not the in Beast Mode (transformed into Kurama)?!! Only confused as you said two clones in Bijuu mode so it wounded like they were like tailed beasts.

    Osoi Jikan....too lazy to look up what it means, but it reminds me of Captain Yammamoto's bankai...the Jikan reminds me of the final part of his Shikai O.o
    Btw. I've changed it to "Gensoku-ji". A more accurate translation
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    hello orange hokage bye kishi nice
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

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    hello orange hokage bye kishi nice
    Hahahaha. Thanks a lot
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    :scorps: great work I must admit
    just fix the grammar a bit :y
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Quote Originally Posted by Uxellius View Post
    :scorps: great work I must admit
    just fix the grammar a bit :y
    Thanks..I will admit I do rush sometimes and don't revise my work enough..I'm doing all of this on my phone as well
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Oh?...i see what you mean. It sounds cool but its a fan fic so you have to detail everything, i just wanted to hear people thoughts
     
         

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    Re: The Final Fight Chapter 4

    Your English is good, your structure seem a bit messy at times. Also the sentences seems a bit "jumpy" from time to time, and you have forgotten some capital letters and such here and there. Still the story is interesting (from what I read, as I only read bits of this chapter), and the interaction between the characters are good. Keep it up
     
         

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