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    1. 01-07-2013, 12:35 AM #1
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      I wrote a rap trying to concentrate more on my punchline, and make them a bit deeper. Tell me what you think.
      		 
           
    2. 01-07-2013, 12:37 AM #2
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

      Bout to listen. i am an audio engineer I'm a bit critical.
      		 
           
    3. 01-07-2013, 12:40 AM #3
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

      can you battle rap
      		 
           
    4. 01-07-2013, 12:42 AM #4
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

      You have potential. Just work on your diction and annunciation. I like the delivery line the most. try over a beat.
      		 
           
    5. 01-07-2013, 12:45 AM #5
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

      Quote Originally Posted by jiraiya lives View Post
      can you battle rap
      audio battle? 60 seconds a piece ?
      		 
           
    6. 01-07-2013, 12:48 AM #6
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      audio battle? 60 seconds a piece ?
      no I was just asking
      		 
           
    7. 01-07-2013, 01:18 AM #7
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

      Quote Originally Posted by SamuraiClownSenju View Post
      You have potential. Just work on your diction and annunciation. I like the delivery line the most. try over a beat.
      I dont think I could find a beat to match it if I tried. lol
      		 
           
    8. 01-07-2013, 01:54 AM #8
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

      no flow mayn :/ lyrics are aight tho
      		 
           
    9. 01-07-2013, 01:57 AM #9
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      no flow mayn :/ lyrics are aight tho
      Can someone please tell how I can improve my flow! Everyone has been saying though I see no wrong in my flow. =/
      		 
           
    10. 01-07-2013, 02:00 AM #10
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      Quote Originally Posted by Shade Dracova View Post
      Can someone please tell how I can improve my flow! Everyone has been saying though I see no wrong in my flow. =/
      well i mean practise over a beat fir one.. cos i know that nobody could put a beat over that acapella you're saying it all as one sentence and not fitting that tempo that alll music has..it sounds more like spoken words than rap...spit over a beat till it sounds smooth [=
      		 
           
    11. 01-07-2013, 02:06 AM #11
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

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      no flow mayn :/ lyrics are aight tho
      get me ya email my guy
      		 
           
    12. 01-07-2013, 02:55 AM #12
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

      ayy but fam you said " i'm the creame of the crop like cheese in a pot" me and my bro started bussin up wtf does that mean!! but other than that i like
      		 
           
    13. 01-07-2013, 04:19 AM #13
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      ayy but fam you said " i'm the creame of the crop like cheese in a pot" me and my bro started bussin up wtf does that mean!! but other than that i like
      Cream of corn looks similar to melted cheese in a pot. A little silly. I know
      		 
           
    14. 01-07-2013, 06:07 AM #14
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      Re: Beastly Lyricism

      I'd say to start writing to songs instead of just writing. Otherwise, your verses will not sound natural when you place them on songs. Sometimes it works, here it didn't really do so.
      		 
           
    15. 01-07-2013, 06:58 AM #15
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      Quote Originally Posted by Lord of Kaos View Post
      I'd say to start writing to songs instead of just writing. Otherwise, your verses will not sound natural when you place them on songs. Sometimes it works, here it didn't really do so.
      I have tried it though I enjoy this a bit more. Thank all for your comments. All of will be taken into consideration.
      		 
           
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