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    The beginnings of Akatsuki #9


    previously: The story takes place after Hashirama vs Madara. (Tobi is a random Uchiha here.) Madara had formed Akatsuki and hid in the shadows,but they managed to capture Tobirama, so Akatsuki could made its move.In exchange for Tobirama's life, Madara made Hashirama sacrifice himself. Then they released Tobirama, but he was under genjutsu. The hokage's advisor and the head of the Hyuga clan cancelled the genjutsu, and Tobirama tried to warn the other nations to be careful. Unfortunately, Zetsu and his clones killed the messengers and gave false messages to the villages. This was Madara's plan to turn the nations against each other and start a war. In addition,he sent his men to kill the kages...The first match was Tokage, a new member of Akatsuki , vs Hisashi, the 1st Tsuchikage. The second match is Kakuzu vs Kazuki the 1st Mizukage. Then Zetsu fought the 1st kazekage, Isao.

    Chapter 1:http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=246794

    Chapter 2:http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=248759

    Chapter 3:http://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=251401

    Chapter 4:http://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=253386

    Chapter 5:http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=256020

    Chapter 6:http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=258817

    Chapter 7:http://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=262433

    Chapter 8: http://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=335305


    Chapter 9


    The Raikage's Stand


    It was an average day in Kumogakure. As always, the village was enveloped by fuzzy clouds, hiding the acropolis from the eyes of malevolent intruders. Ryuu, the first Raikage was looking out of the window of his mansion, watching the training of the youngsters.

    -Nice move Ryo, as expected of the son of Raikage sama- praised the teacher, when the kid hit the bull’s eye on a tree with his kunai.

    -Aww, Ryo kun is the best- sighed all the girls around.

    -Humph! What’s so good about him? He was just lucky...-humphed some boy, and threw his kunai aiming the target, but he missed with several metres. Everyone burst out in a laughther, except for Ryo.

    -Don’t make fun out of him, he’ll do better next time, right?

    -Just shut up, I’ll surpass you one day!- cried the boy ashamed, lagging away.

    -Alright everyone, keep on practicing! –said the sensei, and the children continued their training.

    -Your son will be a great leader one day, Ryuu sama- the Raikage’s advisor stepped next to his master, and the two men were watching the scene together.
    Suddenly a jounin-rank ninja appeared.

    -Raikage sama, someone has entered the barrier. Our sentinels failed to report, so it’s safe to assume that they were taken down.
    -Can it be more than one intruder? Noone would be stupid enough to attack alone.-said the advisor anxiously.

    -I’ll handle the situation. No matter how many invaders are there. You take care of the training students.- turned the Raikage to his right-hand man, then headed towards the exit.

    He checked the nearest watchtower first, but it was too late. The watchmen were already dead. Then it happened. Someone tried to stab him from behind, but the Raikage took notice in time and managed to evade. Not wasting a moment, Ryuu threw a bunch of kunais towards his masked enemy, but they slipped through his body.

    „What the hell!”-thought Ryuu.-„In that case...”-he formed a sequel of handsigns, and a huge barrier emerged, covering a large area of the plateau.

    -Oh, a barriertechnique? Do you think that’d work on me?-asked Tobi.

    -Who are you, and what do you want?

    -Hm, I’m noone, and my mission is to kill you.

    -Don’t be ridiculous!-snarled the huge kage, and he took out a shuriken of his gear. He added lightning chakra to the shuriken, thus enhancing it’s sharpness and range, then threw it in the direction of Tobi. In the meantime he performed another set of handseals, and made the shurikens multiply. Several hundred shurikens headed towards Tobi, but all of them slipped through without further effect.

    „So his whole body is intangible”- thought the Raikage, then using the body flicker, in a blink of an eye he appeared in front of Tobi and tried to land a fatal blow, but Tobi countered his attack with his left hand, and at the same time started to warp him into an opening dimension.„What the hell is this”-the Raikage was surprised, but didn’t lose his cool. All of a sudden hundreds of clones appeared and attacked Tobi. He had to cancel the warping process, so the Raikage could jump back. Tobi tried to make himself intangible, but it was too late, the clones turned into a huge bolt of lightning before he could have realized. Tobi was shocked, and fell on the ground.

    -How...when did you make all those raiton- clones?-asked Tobi with fear in his voice.

    -This barrier. The main purpose of it is not to close off the battlefield. It casts a genjutsu on the enemies inside it. Though it needs some time to activate. You fell under my spell the moment I threw that shuriken against you.

    -So the following handsigns were not for a shuriken jutsu, but for the clones. It was the clones who threw all of those shuriken!- Tobi got angry when he came to the realization of his failure.

    -Exactly. This genjustu manipulates the perception of time in your head. -claimed the Raikage.-And now, die! Though, I won’t go close to you. You have a nasty space-time technique.- All that said, Ryuu took a long whip that was attached to his belt, and lashed it, running lightning through it.

    „Damn, I have no choice”-thought Tobi, and closed his left eye.

    The lash hit Tobi, and his numb body was covered in blood, motionlessly. Ryuu cancelled the barrier, he was exhausted. But there was no time for resting, as the carcass disappeared and Tobi popped up behind the gasping kage. Ryuu was aware of being attacked, but Tobi gave him no time to evade. The Raikage’s chest was pierced, and he fell, coughing blood.

    -How did you...-groaned the dying man.

    -Well, maybe your genjustu fooled my sharingan, but there is much more to this eye...

    -The sharingan? Impossible!

    -No, it’s not impossible!-laughed Tobi.-Die already!-and he kicked the writhing Raikage.

    Tobi couldn’t enjoy his victory furthermore, as a large squad of Kumogakure ninjas could be seen heading to the scene of the battle.

    -It seems that you’ve got reinforcements. Not that it makes a difference. So long!- said Tobi, and warped himself into his dimension, thinking: „Damn, Madara will scold me that I have to sacrifice an eye for izanagi every time I fight.”

    -Raikage sama!-shouted the jounin who reported at the raikage’s mansion.

    -Hold on, father!-Ryo was running towards his old man. He bent down, and laid his dad’s head onto his lap.-Don’t die father! –his tears fell onto the face of the dead man.

    -Ryo kun, I’m sorry, we were late!

    -No! He still can be saved!-cried Ryo, but he knew the harsh truth as he looked into the dim eyes of his father. The Raikage’s dead eyes were looking onto the sky. The blood painted red the fuzzy clouds, that started to cry. The tears of Ryo were mixed in the rain.

    At the same time, Tobi, wearing the Akatsuki’s black robe with red clouds, appeared at Madara’s hideout.
     
         
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    you were so close.
     

    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    Nice fanfic might look at all of it sometime
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    nice descriptive visuals kiddo kobak
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    great chapter man
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    What it is?? As i know akatsuki is from konan, nagato and yahiko..
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    Quote Originally Posted by Untung View Post
    What it is?? As i know akatsuki is from konan, nagato and yahiko..
    It's called a fanFICTION O__O Alternative :shrug:
     
         
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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    Quote Originally Posted by Untung View Post
    What it is?? As i know akatsuki is from konan, nagato and yahiko..
    Lmao, you might be lost kid, this isn't the Naruto Discussion section.
    Go here instead:
    http://narutobase.net/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=12
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    Quote Originally Posted by Kages View Post
    Nice fanfic might look at all of it sometime
    Quote Originally Posted by foxyladyland View Post
    nice descriptive visuals kiddo kobak
    Quote Originally Posted by « Killer Vision » View Post
    great chapter man
    Thanks guys!
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    Man... seeing your creativity you should start RPing

    Nice chapter ^^
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    impressed
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

    Chapter is good. Your writing has improved.
    Keep up the good work and I hope to read the next chapter soon
     
         

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    Re: The beginnings of Akatsuki #9

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    Chapter is good. Your writing has improved.
    Keep up the good work and I hope to read the next chapter soon
    Thank you I'll post it tomorrow
     
         

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