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    Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    Wassup NB, so I finished the rap, lol, some of you guys read it already, and for those who did please read the third verse starting at 3:04......should I keep the original ending or change it to the seconding ending?

    please help me out


    I finished the third verse .....how is it, should I keep the ending of the third verse or should I make him text her that she'll be waiting, this actually happened to me but I wanna change the ending up a little bit


    Starts at 0:18


    My mind is on lockdown, my only thoughts are of you
    I’m reminiscing on the past, contemplating what to do, I’m confused
    wanting those feelings when our relationship was new
    but it’s gone girl, killed on this battlefield of truth
    I trusted you, but you took that trust and with it ran a mile
    filling me with illusions that this shit was worth while
    only if I knew there was a devil behind that pretty smile
    had me blinded by love but now that I opened my eyes
    I know it was a lie when you said you’ll always be mines
    shoulda asked where and why you were going those times
    but I’ll look into your eyes and say it’s okay girl , it’s fine
    it’s fine, when I ask you’ll act like I committed a crime
    and for more and more of our dates you started to decline
    when you said I love you a cold chill ran down my spine
    those words were empty, you had no type of emotion in your eyes
    but then one day I decide to follow you secretly from behind
    and to my surprise, only to find you kissing another guy
    and my only question before my heart broke was why

    verse 2


    I don’t know what I did wrong, thought I did everything right
    crying *and saying you love me, that it’s not what it looks like
    that I should listen you, and not believe what I saw with my eyes*
    you’re already spinning your web, and *tryna trap me like a fly
    I’m not falling for your traps, cause I changed for the better
    and I thought you did the same, but you switch up like the weather*
    every night you’re in my dreams, my first thought in the morning
    use to say I’ll do anything for you, and you said you’ll do the same for *me*
    but it shames me how our love turned into a war story*
    how we argued ‘bout where you went and you wouldn’t reply*
    but even though you broke my heart I still can’t say goodbye

    verse 3

    so I woke up the next morning, noticing that you texted me all night
    how you were sorry you lied and you want to get over this fight
    and how you still loved me and I should understand your plight
    but I don’t think you understand that what you did wasn’t right
    you can’t play with emotions and say fuk what we had
    and then turn around and apologize cause you know this is bad
    and you sent me a video, saying you cried yourself to sleep
    how you wanna talk at the park and you want us to meet
    and that I don’t have to come, but you’ll be sitting there shaking
    with your hands to your chest, talking to God, praying
    and without thinking i slipped on my shoes cause I knew you were waiting


    or alternate verse 3 ending

    and that I don’t have to come, but you’ll be sitting there shaking
    with your hands to your chest, talking to God, praying
    but as tears dropped on my phone screen I texted, “ I guess you’ll be waiting.”
     
         

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    Re: Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    hip hop is better than rap!
     
         

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    Re: Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    Awesome song bro!
     
         

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    Re: Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    I think u need to say the words out loud to make it sound betternice though
     
         

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    Re: Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    Quote Originally Posted by foxyladyland View Post
    I think u need to say the words out loud to make it sound betternice though
    I plan on recording soon
     
         

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    Re: Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    Quote Originally Posted by NarutAwesome View Post
    I plan on recording soon
    want me to sing your hooks and choruses? I have connects in radio & music
     
         

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    Re: Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    Quote Originally Posted by foxyladyland View Post
    want me to sing your hooks and choruses? I have connects in radio & music
    sure, I had no idea you did.......it's nice to see other people who like music on the base
     
         

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    Re: Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    Quote Originally Posted by NarutAwesome View Post
    sure, I had no idea you did.......it's nice to see other people who like music on the base
    yeah I do, I know people in radio, ive went to school with some
    could've married one of my girls in radio, maybe two
     
         

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    Re: Advice my fellow NB friends :)

    Quote Originally Posted by foxyladyland View Post
    yeah I do, I know people in radio, ive went to school with some
    could've married one of my girls in radio, maybe two
    I envy you so much right now, lol, so what kind of genre do they produce
     
         

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