Results 1 to 8 of 8
  1. #1
    Banned
    Status
    FoxSikes is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    May 2012
    Posts
    4,145
    Kuruma is based off of the man
    in my sig!
     

    Naruto and Harry Potter Crossover. My Style Chapter 1!

    Hello everyone, this is chapter one of my 65 page chapter that I have due for creative writing. I have to combine 2 different stories and make the settings and characters flow together in a crossover. Tell me what you guys think! This is rough draft to part! I have 5 weeks left to finish this whole project! Thank you to anyone who gave me Naruto Ninja Class ideas for Hogwarts! I will take all comments and criticism!

    Chapter One

    The Peculiar Meeting

    Privet Drive is one of the most ordinary streets to ever exist in the world. The people who lived in this neighborhood were so normal that they were boring. Mr. and Mrs. Dursley, however, are the most boring and most normal people out of anyone who lives in Privet Drive. They absolutely have no respect and no toleration to anything out of the ordinary. Petunia Dursley is a very scrawny woman who spends most of her day cooking, cleaning, and , of course, spying on the neighbors which has become her absolute favorite past time. Vernon Dursley is a fat man with a gigantic mustache who owns his own drilling company. He spends most of his day yelling, eating, and yelling some more. The Dursleys have a son named Dudley who, to them, isby far the most fantastic child to ever exist. To the Dursleys, life is perfect or was perfect until one day that would change their lives forever.

    As Mr. and Mrs. Dursley went to bed one Monday Night, they did not notice that a strange man had appeared, as if by jet speed, at Privet Drive. The man had long black hair, tan skin, and dark eyes that reflected the moon overhead. As the man made his way towards his destination, he came to an abrupt halt. He had noticed an unusual frog that had strange red markings around its eyes and a stare that told the man that the frog was watching him with purpose. "Come out Jiraiya. There is no point in hiding anymore," said the man in a calm voice. Instantly, the frog opened its mouth. A hand had popped out of it, followed by what appeared to be long white hair. Very soon, where there had been a frog, now stood a man who looked so out of palce, that Mrs. Petunia would faint at the very sight of him.

    "Is it true, Hashirama? Has Madara really been stopped?" asked Jiraiya. "I see you have certainly not lost your information gathering abilities," answered Hashirama. The stars and moon shined down as the night air blew Hashirama's hair gently. Hashirama looked at Jiraya and said, "Madara was indeed stopped tonight. He was stopped by a boy who has barely turned twelve months old." Jiraiya's eyes opened up as his mouth dropped in awe. It appeared that by whatever Hashirama just said came as a complete shock. "A.. A Boy? questioned Jiraiya in disbelief. The wind that was blowing seemed to have come to a stop. Hashirama smiled as if he was expecting Jiraiya's disbelief. Knowing full well that he had a lot of explaining to do, Hashirama beckoned Jiraiya to follow him.

    Had anyone been awake to witness the two man on the dark street, they would have thought they were dream because the two man had just jumped through the air as if gravity had no baring on them. They landed silently on a rooftop. Hashirama sat down and crossed his legs. Jiraiya had followed his movements, and he too sat down. Hashirama knew he had time to spare. He took a deep breath and as Jiraiya focused on him Hashirama started to speak. "Today, Madara invaded Minato and Kushina Namikaze's home. He was after something. Something I still do not know what. With him, he brought the Nine Tailed Fox and with him, Madara began to cause complete chaos. Minato and Kushina fought their hearts out. Of course, Madara as he currently is and with the fox in his control, was able to overpower Minato and Kushina. They say Madara has somehow acquired my very own special power. They say he has all the abilities I currently possess. But they say, he has also gained something that even I can never imagine having. Rumor has it Madara has acquired the Rinnegan. As you know it is the very same eye that the sage, himself, used to conquer and stop the Ten Tails. If the Rumors were true, then even I would be no match for him. However, as Minato appeared to be dying, he summoned up the last of his strength and somehow sealed the fox inside of his new baby boy, Naruto. Him and Kushina perished as Madara delivered the final blows to them. As Madara approached Naruto to kill him and set the Fox free once more, something stranger than anything happened. A second baby was lying not too far from Naruto. This second baby caught Madara's full attention because it was not crying. It was, in fact, looking straight at Madara as if Madara was as terrifying as a panda. Madara thought that the baby was simply born crazy. How wrong he was. As he broke his eyes away from the second baby, he started to walk towards Naruto again but just as he was about to place his hand on Naruto, the second baby finally let out a cry as if he knew what was about to happen. Madara, once again, turned his attention to the second baby and this time, it seemed that his attention would not have been broken again for the baby's eyes had taken a shape, color, and form that even Madara did not know about. The whites of the eyes had turned dark blue and the eye itself had become blood red with the pupil becoming purple and changing shape to a diamond. At first Madara thought he was in a genjutsu but he was wrong. The boy had done something that even Madara was powerless against. The boy had somehow caused Madara to experience deep pain. This pain was not an illusion for it was taking a physical affect on Madara. As Madara cried out, his body was being wasted away. His very skin had started to peel and the muscles and bones had started to turn to dust. Madara was completely helpless as none of his powers were working. Nothing he did or wanted to do could have saved him. With a final yell that reached the heavens, Madara had turned into nothing. He had simply dissolved into the night. The boy did something that no one else could have been able to do. He killed Madara."

    Jiraiya looked as if he was sitting on ice because as Hashirama told the story, his body had started to shiver. Hashirama knew that words had escaped Jiraiya. Before Jiraiya could gather himself up and ask where the boy was being taken, a thud caused him and Hashirama to look up. Standing before them was a white haired man with red eyes and strange lines on his face. In his arms there was a bundle. Looking straight at Hashirama, The bundle started to move at Tobirama's voice. From inside, a tiny hand had stuck out. Hashirama looked from the bundle to the new white haired man. "It's time," Hashirama said. At his words, all three men had vanished. The night air began to fill with an ominous aura. The moon became covered in clouds as the three men appeared outside the Dursley's House.


    I have just started Chapter 2 and will post it very soon. I hope you guys enjoy my little crossover adventure and feel free to tell me your ideas as well!
     
         

  2. #2
    Future Presidente DoubleA49's Avatar
    Status
    DoubleA49 is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Dec 2012
    Posts
    1,177
    Location
    Michigan
    Writing some stuff... It's a
    surprise...
     



    Re: Naruto and Harry Potter Crossover. My Style Chapter 1!

     
         

  3. #3
    Banned
    Status
    FoxSikes is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    May 2012
    Posts
    4,145
    Kuruma is based off of the man
    in my sig!
     

    Re: Naruto and Harry Potter Crossover. My Style Chapter 1!

    Quote Originally Posted by DoubleA49 View Post
    Thank
    You critism accepted as well !
     
         

  4. #4
    Future Presidente DoubleA49's Avatar
    Status
    DoubleA49 is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Dec 2012
    Posts
    1,177
    Location
    Michigan
    Writing some stuff... It's a
    surprise...
     



    Re: Naruto and Harry Potter Crossover. My Style Chapter 1!

    Quote Originally Posted by FoxSikes View Post
    Thank
    You critism accepted as well !
    Alright.

    1. Your story is solid.
    2. Your writing is solid
    3. description is fairly decent. on a 10 point scale: 7.5/10

    I like how this is due in creative writing! I can already tell it will score between A-A+

    Nice short summary of Naruto, however, you could of mentioned the whole shinobi world thing. That would have perfected the summary of Naruto.


    (If it's between the entire Harry Potter character set vs. Naruto's I can't wait for Hashirama or Jiraiya vs. Dumbledore and Madara or Hashirama vs. Voldemort.)

    (If it's the good guys vs. bad then I can't wait to see Naruto and Harry working together.)

    I'm not much for criticism, but Germanicus may be open to help!
     
         

  5. #5
    Banned
    Status
    FoxSikes is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    May 2012
    Posts
    4,145
    Kuruma is based off of the man
    in my sig!
     

    Re: Naruto and Harry Potter Crossover. My Style Chapter 1!

    Quote Originally Posted by DoubleA49 View Post
    Alright.

    1. Your story is solid.
    2. Your writing is solid
    3. description is fairly decent. on a 10 point scale: 7.5/10

    I like how this is due in creative writing! I can already tell it will score between A-A+

    Nice short summary of Naruto, however, you could of mentioned the whole shinobi world thing. That would have perfected the summary of Naruto.


    (If it's between the entire Harry Potter character set vs. Naruto's I can't wait for Hashirama or Jiraiya vs. Dumbledore and Madara or Hashirama vs. Voldemort.)

    (If it's the good guys vs. bad then I can't wait to see Naruto and Harry working together.)

    I'm not much for criticism, but Germanicus may be open to help!
    Thank you !!!! Much appreciated and the ninja world will be explained in following chapters just like Te wizard world was introduced with hagrid who came chapters after the first
     
         

  6. #6
    Senior Member
    Status
    Kages is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Nov 2012
    Posts
    16,414
    you were so close.
     

    Re: Naruto and Harry Potter Crossover. My Style Chapter 1!

    Not bad I liked it and enjoyed ^^
     
         

  7. #7
    Hori's Avatar
    Status
    Hori is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    Aug 2012
    Posts
    82,175
    Location
    Cuba, Camaguey
    Whatever goes upon two legs is
    a friend, whatever goes upon
    four legs, or has wings, is an
    enemy.
     



    Re: Naruto and Harry Potter Crossover. My Style Chapter 1!



    I want more please!!
     
         

  8. #8
    Banned
    Status
    FoxSikes is offline
    Gender
    Join Date
    May 2012
    Posts
    4,145
    Kuruma is based off of the man
    in my sig!
     

    Re: Naruto and Harry Potter Crossover. My Style Chapter 1!

    Quote Originally Posted by Horidora Chan View Post


    I want more please!!
    More will
    Come
    !
     
         

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •