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    Yagura Ryu's story !!

    Ok my first ever fanfiction ive ever done so be nice please and tell me what you think... depending on what you all think will depend on if i do more :D

    it is a little bit short because of it being my first time writing a fanfiction also things will pick up more this is just the beginning ^^

    Yagura Ryu’s story


    Chapter 1

    It has been 500 years since the ending of Naruto and Sasuke’s story, a new world for ninja to live in was soon created. All thanks to their efforts and sacrifice, peace was finally achieved. However now a new threat begins and one village aims to destroy that peace that the two heroes’s fought so hard to achieve.

    The story begins


    A young boy lays within the deep grass of Konohagakure taking in the intense rays of the sun when the peace is suddenly shattered by a familiar voice

    Girl: “Ryu- kun! Ryu-kun! Jeez where is that incompetent fool”.

    The girl lets out a sigh when she suddenly see’s his silverfish black hair gleaming within the sunlight

    Girl: Aha! Found you now Ryu-kun.

    The girl walks up to Ryu and takes a deep breath when she suddenly lets out a mighty roar

    Girl: “WAKE UP!!”

    Ryu jumps up with a startle ready for battle when he realises it’s only a girl

    Ryu: “Ah it’s only you Kaede-chan, jeez you have such a big mouth”
    Kaede: “well maybe if you didn’t sleep so much when our mission is close I wouldn’t have to raise my voice”
    Ryu: “That’s raising your voice?!! I would hate to hear you shout”
    Kaede: “whatever! Sensei is waiting so hurry up!
    Ryu: “Ah ye that’s right, he promised to train us today didn’t he”
    Kaede: “That’s right, now come on!”
    Kaede pull’s on Ryu’s arm as they run to the training area
    Kaede: “hurry up we’re late!”
    Ryu: “Will you stop your whining I’m coming”
    Finally the training field comes into sight as they begin to pick up their pace
    Ryu: “See we managed to get here in time so no big deal”
    ???: “Your late! We have been waiting for over 20 minutes now”
    Ryu: “Ah sabuto! When did you get here?
    Sabuto: “Me and Sensei have been doing some warm up exercises, I was here 10 minutes early”
    Ryu: “That’s just like you”

    Ryu begins to shake is head at Sabuto when a gust of wind savagely gusts past with intense force, a silhouette of a man is seen just through the gust of wind

    Kaede: “Sensei!”
    ???: “your both late, I would expect this from Ryu but to think that even you would be late Kaede”
    Ryu & Kaede: “Sorry Katetsu-Sensei!”

    Katetsu lets out a big sigh as he goes onto scold both Ryu and Kaede

    Katetsu: “For a member of the Yagura clan you really should try your best Ryu-kun”

    Ryu begins to clench his fists in anger and frustration as Katetsu is scolding him until he finally lets out his frustration

    Ryu: “I don’t care! I am my own person and I will not be lumped together with the so called elites”

    Katetsu lets out another sigh and then looks around the area as he thinks to himself

    Katetsu: “fine, let’s get out your frustration, how about you and sabuto have a sparring match? It will make for good training as well as let off some steam”
    Ryu: “Fine with me”
    Katetsu: “Sabuto?”
    Sabuto: “I guess it will be a nice warm up I suppose”

    Ryu and Sabuto begin to stare each other down, you can clearly see that there is a burning rivalry between these two, Sabuto from the hayashi clan and Ryu from the Yagura clan, two ninja from two elite clans.

    Ryu begins to shuffle his feet forward toward Sabuto with his eyes fixed on Sabuto’s movements, Sabuto suddenly disappears and within a few seconds is but millimetres in front on Ryu as he goes to deliver a palm strike from a horse stance towards the chest area.

    Ryu barely manages to side step the attack as he retaliates with a swift side kick towards Sabuto’s head, Sabuto easily dodges this attack by ducking and brings up a knee into Ryu’s ribs, the attack connects as Ryu is left winded, Ryu recovers quickly and creates some distance between both himself and Sabuto.

    Ryu begins to gathers his chakra as he calls out Wind release: Blade of wind Ryu throws down his arm as if it was a sword and lets off a wind blade heading towards Sabuto, Sabuto side steps the technique yet again as he gets in close to Ryu and delivers a devastating blow to the throat.

    Ryu falls to the floor from Sabuto’s overwhelming attack, Sabuto begins to walk away as Ryu struggles to get up to his knees and begins to stare down Sabuto yet again.

    Ryu: “we ... are not... done yet!”

    To be continued...
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    yagura clan?? also kaede... yeah totally sakura, nice job :I
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    Quote Originally Posted by AllomnisymbolsparttwoT View Post
    yagura clan?? also kaede... yeah totally sakura, nice job :I
    lol i wasnt going for a sakura character and yes i thought i would be more original rather than just use clans that already existed.. although those clans will still appear in future chapters... if people like it
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    Woooooo aiight i like cant wait for chapter 2
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    Quote Originally Posted by Sefirosu Masamune View Post
    Woooooo aiight i like cant wait for chapter 2
    thank you ^^ i hope u enjoyed it.. is there anything i could improve on at all ?
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    Next chapter, plz! xD

    It's cool, keep it up. :D
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    Round of applause pretty good I liked it!
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    Not bad.
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    Not bad at all keep it going bro
     
         

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    Re: Yagura Ryu's story !!

    impressed......
     
         

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