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    Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

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    • That is Fanfiction about Sage of six paths vs Juubi battle
    • All characters belong to Masashi Kishimoto
    • There is two theories I believe:
      1)Sage of six paths was Uzumaki and Hyuuga hybrid before being Juubi Jinchurki
      2) Sage of six patgs got Rinnegan from heavens as gift to fight Juubi.


    Judgement of Progenitor

    [Clouds of Smoke are floating everywhere]
    [Burnt and some still burning houses are Shown at left and right side. Some houses were shown falling aparts]
    SFX: BURN, DISSOLVE, FALL, DROP, BURST, !
    [Between two large villages/cities narrow stone bridge placed high over ground is comming]
    [The man finally stands face to face with Ancient beast, Progenitor of This Wold.]
    [The man known as Riku, the most powerfull and choosen one by heavens. Riku was known as Priest, who tried to taught Ninshu to people and prevented tragedy before it occured, unfortunetly he failed. ]
    [Riku called beast very loudly cause soundwaves to reflect from surrondings creating echo effect]
    Riku: Ame no Hitotsu no Kami !
    SFX: Ame no Hitotsu no Kami ! Ame no Hitotsu no Kami ! Ame no Hitotsu no Kami !
    [Rainstorm was occuring around as heavy rain drops fall down around them]
    SFX: DROP DROP DROP DROP POUR !
    Juubi(emerges from behind two huge mountains being behind each village ): What do you want from me, mortal ?!
    [Ancient beast, The Juubi was narrowing it's huge eye at the man who was standing in front of it.]
    [Rain drops were flowing on Riku's cheeks then falling on his already wet clothes ]
    SFX: POUR,RAINING FALL, DRIP, DROP, DRIP , DROP!
    Riku: Why did you do it ?!, Why do you keep doing it ?!, Tell me !
    [Riku was breathing heavily as The beast narrows it's eye even more while looking at man]
    SFX: BREATH, BREATH, SWALLOWS !
    Riku: Wasn't you sent by Ancient, God of gods to create life then protect it !
    Juubi(in deep and frighting voice): That is true, mortal. I was sent there to protect life, enviroment, nature itself from any harms, and
    SFX: THUNDER THUNDER !
    [Lightining is shown stirking around ]
    Riku(astonished): ?!
    Juubi(growls): That why I will erase humankind from this beautifull World !
    Riku: What ?!, Why ?!
    Juubi: Because Humankind wasn't created by me, as mortals are used to think. I only created nature itself on this planet, created Mountain, earth, water, fire and air..., but Humandkind were created by Ancient-sama, himself !
    Riku: Then why ?!
    Juubi: You ask why I am destroying houses, villages and burn these houses along with killing people, yes ?!
    Juubi: The reason is that humankind is threat to existence of nature, my own creation !(growls, then calm down), The ground, itself is so much steeped by evil of humankind. Exactly the humankind corrupted this world so much that Nature is dying around. Can you decline that, mortal?
    Riku(lower his head slowly in defeat): No...
    [Heavy Rain drops are hitting ground as Riku begin to moves down as the beast follows it's eye after the mortal]
    SFX: DRIP DROP DRIP DROP !
    Riku(fall on knees and put his hands together as praying): You are right, Ame no Hitotsu no Kami. Please give humankind another chance, I am sure they could ?!(interrupted)
    Juubi(calmly and firmly): No, I can't evil of humankind to spread even more. It is my duty as creator to protect core of this World from influence of any evil.
    SFX: THUNDER THUNDER !
    Riku(fall down his own hands in defeat): I see and Understand
    Juubi: There is nothing you can do, mortal. However I will save you as you are unique one, who understand my duty and that this evil of humankind has to be stopped.
    Riku: Thank you Ame no Hitotsu no Kami, still I can't let you sacrifice so many human lives.(take deep breath)
    Riku: I am here to stop you, Ame no Hitotsu no Kami !
    [Wind is brushing Riku's hair, then hurl away some part of destroyed buildings and carrying it away .]
    SFX: HURL HURL, SWIRL !
    Riku(does handseal and keep it): Forgive me Progenitor...,Sage mode !
    [Riku is shown sitting down in meditation stance with his hands clapped together then closes his eyes]
    [Huge amount of nature energy is shown being drawn into Sage's body from all directions]
    Riku: Let me use your nature energy to enter amplified special state, Sage mode !
    [Juubi narrows it's huge eye at mortal as it is looking at Riku with interest]
    [Riku makes shadow clone handseals then create twenty-five shadow clones.]
    Riku: Multi shadow clone technique !
    [Riku's sage shadow clones split as they rush to take place in four choosen places, five of them at each place. ]
    Juubi: Everything is futile, mortal, but do it whatever you plan to do
    [All Riku's sage shadow clones are shown at their places, five of them at each direction]
    Riku(weaves through few handseals ): Let's begin, Sage art: Complex square barrier of nature forces !
    Juubi: ?!
    [five of Riku's sage shadow clones from all four places shoot off five different elements of nature: fire, wind, water, lightining, earth then all of these elements merge creating white stream. All of white streams shoot off in the air then connect together above Juubi, creating special chakra barrier in shape of square. ]
    Juubi: that all ?!, I will bring my judgement to humankind then
    [Juubi focus as it's all tails stop moving and keep in place.]
    [The ground shakes, air begin to become heavier and heavier by each second passed, temperature of air rise up rapidly creating so much heat that can burn skin.]
    Juubi: Natural disa ?!(interrupt)
    [Juubi try to gather more nature energy but is unable to do it]
    Juubi(looks around then lock it's eye at Riku): (growls)You !, that is your work.
    Riku(struggling to breath): That right, I have done it to make you unable to use your godly powers.(take breath). This special barrier consits from five layers made of five different nature elements as Wind, fire, lightining, earth and water, each of these elements are amplified and enhanced by my Sage chakra.
    Juubi: I understimated you, cursed mortal !
    [Juubi swings it's tails furiously at fast rate at Riku]
    Riku: ?!
    [Riku dissapear in amazing speed leaving blur image of him moving in different directions]
    Juubi: ?! Human shouldn't be able to move at such speed, how ?!(growls)
    [Juubi finally stops it's assult with it's tails as Riku lands safely on ground]
    Juubi: let's see how can you stop this, mortal... Demonic Art: Splitting !
    [Juubi is shown splitting in many smaller images of itself as they launch themselves to attack Riku]
    Riku(smirks): Hand to hand combat, fair enough !
    [Riku is shown avoding attacks of mini Juubi's, then while engage himself in taijutsu battle he punches and kick these clones away]
    [Juubi' clones forms some weapons as axe, sword, katana, hammer then charge at Riku]
    [Riku moves his right hand to find his katana then bring it out in front of Juubi's clones at his head's height]
    Juubi's clones: GROARH !
    [Riku is shown exchanging clashes with his katana against Juubi's clones weapons, then add some chakra to Katana pushing them away before cutting through them.]
    [Katana glows surronded by chakra but stops as Juubi's clones are pushed backwards]
    [All Juubi clones growl as they remerge together into huge beast again]
    Juubi: You, mortal. How did you dare do that ?!
    [Riku pulls his katana back in sheath as he keep his both eyes locked at Juubi]
    [Juubi is shown very calm as it's focuses on something.]
    Riku: *What this god pull out this time, I have to stay on my guard. All Humankind counts one me...*(focus) Byakugan !
    [Riku calls Byakugan as his eyes changes into white eyes with pupils becoming more distinct and veins bulge around eyes]
    Juubi: ?! *That mortal, and these eyes, what he is trying to do*
    Riku: ?!
    [Riku spot huge amount of nature energy gathering near Juubi's mouth and compressing in sphere like shape]
    Riku(widden eyes): shit ! Earth release: Shifts of core !
    [The ground is shown shifting up under Juubi raising it higher above stone bridge]
    Juubi: Bijuuda ?!(interrupted)
    Riku: Sage art: Eight Trigrams Vacuum Wall Palm !
    [Riku moves his both hands backwards then rapidly forwards expelling powerfull wave of condensed chakra towards Juubi's chin]
    [Juubi is about to fire black sphere as it is suddenly hit in it's chin in last second cause it to moves it's skull up in sky, shooting black sphere in sky]
    Juubi: ma !
    [Bijuudama hit chakra barrier breaking it apart in process as it ascend flying high in sky]
    END


    Unreal battle

    [Riku is shown looking at godly power with some fear and doubtfull look]
    [Riku is shown standing in front of Juubi, while all Riku's sage shadow clones charge at Juubi from all sides]
    [Juubi swings all of it's tails and destroy all of Riku's shadow clones.]
    Juubi: It didn't work, give up mortal.
    Riku: *This doesn't look good, even although I have advantage in hand to hand combat or using weapons. I can't rival it in Ninjutsu and especially in illusions powers..., genjutsu*
    Juubi: Get out of my way, mortal
    [Juubi swings it's tails again at Riku]
    Riku(spot Juubi'tails incomming at him): Sage art: Eight Trigrams Heaven Rotation !
    [Riku is shown swirling around creating rotating chakra barrier, which reflect Juubi's tails and send them backwards.]
    Juubi(growls): godly power: Tsyukomi !
    Riku: shit !
    [Surroundings around Riku begin to change, fading away to be replaced by all planet covered in flames, everywhere occur war.Human trying to kill another human with nature being dead around. ]
    Juubi(inner voice): Is Humankind really worth to be protected by you, do you really want for that to happen to world !
    Riku: Damn..., I can't, I don't want... (image of suffering humans, good and trying to be better in humans heart) NO !, Sage art: dispeling of illusion powers !
    Juubi(growls): Stubborn mortal, you will die sooner or later ! Godly power: Amaterasu !
    Riku: ?!
    [Suddenly black flames appear on Riku's body covering him completly.]
    Riku(engulfed by black flames): ARGH!!! *it is burning at such high rate, heat emitted by these flames are unreal, how ?!*
    Juubi: give up and I may let you live, mortal
    Riku: No way !, I can't fail all of them...
    [Riku is shown weaving through some handseals while being in pain]
    Riku: Sage art: total control of nature energy
    Juubi
    : ?!
    [Black flames begin to move away from Riku's body in west direction.]
    Juubi: Impossible, how ?!
    [Suddenly Riku make another handseal as he uses eight trigrams chakra palm to push black flames at juubi]
    Juubi(spot black flames incomming): Godly power: Kamui !
    [Juubi become transparent as black flames pass through it, Juubi then turns around and extinguish black flames with it's eye power after becomming tangible.]
    Juubi: Cursed Mortal, let's see how can you stand up to this... Godly power: Kotoamatsukami !
    Riku(become motionless): ?!
    Juubi: very well, now get out of my way, mortal wait until I finish my work !
    Riku: No way, Ame no Hitotsu no Kami !
    Juubi: Impossible, how ?!
    Riku: Perfect connection with nature make me immune to Genjtsu , your illusionary powers.
    Juubi(mad and enraged): sooner or later, I will crush you ! Godly power: Bansho Tenin ! Earth manipulation: Deadly spikes !
    [Riku is shown being drawn towards Juubi]
    [Suddenly earth spikes come out from ground towards Riku]
    Riku: Earth release: Cracking ground !
    [Suddenly ground begin to cracks, cause earth spikes to dissolve into ground.]
    Juubi: Wind manipulation: destructive Slashes !
    Riku: Wind release: Flying control technique !
    [Giant wind slashes appear in air and fly at still being drawn Riku towards Juubi]
    [Suddenly Riku weaves through some handseals as suddenly Riku is enveloped by transparent wind aura]
    [Giant wind slashes fly towards Riku, who flying up and contiune his flight above slashes]
    Juubi(spots Riku flying): Impossible, for mere human to be able to fly, it contradict laws of nature ! Fire manipulation: Stream of flames from hell !
    Riku(weaves through handseals): ?!, Fire release: Fire wall !
    [powerfull stream of flames clashes with fire wall, trying to overpower each other, finally blows changing into large cloud of smoke]
    Juubi: Water manipulation: destructive Geysers !
    Riku(make another handseal): Water release: Rain of water projectiles !
    [water projectiles are shown clashing head on with incomming from ground streams of geysers, stopping each other, cause ground to explode where hole of geyesers were created.]
    Riku(begin to pant): *Damn it..., The Progenitor can repel any of my attacks..., but his amount of energy seems infinite while mine is limited..., what should I do*
    Juubi: *Grr Cursed mortal is still standing in front of me* Lightining manipulation: storm of lightinigs strikes !
    Riku(try to catch up with weaving through handseals): ?! *Shit, I can't* Lightining release: lightining armor ?!(interrupted in last second)
    [Lightining strikes hard hitting Riku in mid air head on, cause Riku' falling down on ground]
    Juubi: Godly power: Asura projectiles !
    [From Juubi tails projectiles/missles shoot off in direction of falling Riku]
    [Riku restores control over his flight as projectiles fly at him]
    Riku: Damn it ! Sage art: Space Time movement of Buddha !
    [Riku is shown focused as nature energy around is shown]
    [Before Riku is hit by self-guided missiles, he dissapear in blur motion]
    Juubi: ?!
    [Suddenly Riku appear behind Juubi's back as he takes Hyuuga stance]
    Riku: Sage art: Eight Trigrams Two hundred fifty-six palms !
    Juubi: ?!
    [Suddenly Riku is shown hitting Juubi in great speed with many strikes as Juubi is screaming in pain]
    [Finally done Riku stops his movement as he pushes Juubi with last one hundred twenty-eight palms]
    Juubi(recover from strikes): *How can this mortal be that powerfull*, it doesn't stop me mortal. To block my all energy-releasing points you would have to close all of my 1024 points
    Riku(wipe sweat away from his face): ?! *Impossible, noone should survive that*
    Juubi: Enough, that was nice warming up, mortal. Now it is time to go serious, get ready
    Riku(suprised totally): ?! *What the hell so what we have been doing until now was just child play ?!*
    END


    Is that End of Riku ?!
    Show of Juubi's godly power !

    What do you think about my fanfic ?!
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    Should I continue or no ?!
     
         
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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    I think the fight was more like a series of battles, and he had to use alot of the weapons we see in naruto because he is holding the sword and staff in his hands in the pic with him and the juubi so i think he had to take juubi parts and use them to get more powerful

    like the gold and silver bros did with nine tails kinda
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    Quote Originally Posted by 2big View Post
    I think the fight was more like a series of battles, and he had to use alot of the weapons we see in naruto because he is holding the sword and staff in his hands in the pic with him and the juubi so i think he had to take juubi parts and use them to get more powerful

    like the gold and silver bros did with nine tails kinda
    I agree with you, but that why this was only warm up before, serious battle. I believes that Sage of six paths, real name: Riku had to use weapons against Juubi in serious battle, because he lost Sage mode etc.

    Again, it is just fanfic, so I write something according to image of it created by my imagination in my mind
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    The Juubi is gaia..?? :/
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    Quote Originally Posted by AllomnisymbolsparttwoT View Post
    The Juubi is gaia..?? :/
    LOL, maybe , again it is just my fanfic about Juubi vs Sage of six paths, this could go down completly different in Kishi mind

    Thanks for reading
     
         
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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    it was so ........(hard to describe)
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    Quote Originally Posted by mohammed2450 View Post
    it was so ........(hard to describe)
    Sorry if it was dissapointing and bad..., I tried a lot, but maybe it wasn't enough

    Anwyay let's enjoy something as mine fanfic while waiting for Kishi's version
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    To tell you the truth I didn't really like your approach to the whole subject. I have already made a fan made about that so you know my opinion about Sage's past. Personally, I way more prefer your predictions on a weekly-basis. You certainly have good writting skills. I think that your approach was the wrong one.
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    Quote Originally Posted by Byron123 View Post
    To tell you the truth I didn't really like your approach to the whole subject. I have already made a fan made about that so you know my opinion about Sage's past. Personally, I way more prefer your predictions on a weekly-basis. You certainly have good writting skills. I think that your approach was the wrong one.
    Well, fair enough. Thanks for sharing your opinion on this topic

    Obviosuly I will keep writing my predictions on a weekly-basis
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    Just leave the fight fanfiction with me ok?
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    Quote Originally Posted by OfficialRikudouSennin View Post
    Just leave the fight fanfiction with me ok?
    If you can write bettter, sure why not

    First show me your fanfiction battle of Juubi vs Sage of six paths, I am waitning

    Anyway thanks a lot for reply
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    Hoy, nice fic, I like the fact that Riku uses barriers against the Juubi, it's probably the most important tool to fight it. Also that he has byakugan is somewhat questionable though, as his story should then be hidden within the Huyga clan (although it could still be, but then why put it on the uchiha shrine). But it's a cool asset for a fan fic

    Haven't been much online lately, am busy with exams though, keep up the good work
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    wow. what an epic fight even it's fanfiction.. i like when riku used hyuuga jutsu
     
         

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    Re: Sage of six paths vs Juubi [FAN FICTION by KCM Naruto]

    Quote Originally Posted by thegame View Post
    Hoy, nice fic, I like the fact that Riku uses barriers against the Juubi, it's probably the most important tool to fight it. Also that he has byakugan is somewhat questionable though, as his story should then be hidden within the Huyga clan (although it could still be, but then why put it on the uchiha shrine). But it's a cool asset for a fan fic

    Haven't been much online lately, am busy with exams though, keep up the good work
    Thanks a lot for honest feedback and good luck with exams

    Quote Originally Posted by Vierdace View Post
    wow. what an epic fight even it's fanfiction.. i like when riku used hyuuga jutsu
    Thank you very much for feedback, I am glad you enjoyed reading it
     
         

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