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    The Ninja Way Reborn

    My first Fanfic ive tried so be nice.Its set in odern day.Where something like a virus will be released.and yeh not spiling too much.
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    It had been several years now that Scientist from the village hidden in the leaf had been trying to geneticlly modify the cells of several babies to reproduce the 1st's ability to manipulate wood.Today was no expection.As always they would come to the hospital at dawn and under the supervisation of the new head Medic Sakura Haruno work on the cells.The day had been nearly over but at the last minute one of the chuunin level medic-nin had made a terrible mistake.Which lead to the baby writhing and spazzing in the air seemingly defying gravity.The babies eyes hollowed,the body paler and any hair,fingernails seemingly desinergrated Upon this happening Sakura sent for Naruto Uzumaki the only ninja belonging to the entire village hidden in the leaf that could possibly save the village from the ticking time bomb Now building up within the child.

    Meanwhile
    The air outside was cold as usual it tended to be at 7:30 am in Australia.A boy began walking to school having to take several alleys to reach it in time.He walked past the bus where he saw the similar people who rode the bus.One as the bus came past him halting to a stop even tried to say something however because the bus screeched when it braked the boy heard nothing and simply kept walking.Altogether it took several minutes to reach the school.Where he would go up the side of the office and to the outside of the school's library noticing however that no-one was here.He went into the library and went straight to the fiction part.The boy had an interest in books concerning pre technology and mythology areas.Hence one of the reasons he enjoyed Monday mornings as he had Ancient history first up.So he grabbed a book titled The Ninja's Way and set off.Walking back outside to the bag racks and quickly put it in his bag to read later on.In maths he thought.When walking over to the seats one of his friends he had just arrived called out
    "Hey Blaise check this out."
    And with that he picked up a stick from the ground and threw it the handball courts present to the seats left if you were looking away from the library.Barely missing one of the chubby Kids in our year level.When suddenly we heard a voice.That of a girls voice.
    "DAMIEN! dont throw sticks at him he's just special he cant help it if he hangs out with grade 8's all the time!"
    And at her last comment we all crack up with laughter.Only to suddenly be blasted of our seats and into the ground all landing with a grunt.

    Narutoverse
    Naruto had finally arrived,sakura let out a sigh quickly yelling over the screams and banging in the backround
    "Naruto we need you to teleport that baby away its going to explode and destroy the whole village if you dont!"
    Hearing those words naruto's eyes widen in horror realising such a thing was happening.He heard of it happening in a distant village however they were unable to be saved.Naruto refused to allow hisvillage As rokudaime to let that happen and so even though it wasn't perfected Naruto held out his hand sending his time/space ninjutsu out creating a portal into nowhere or so Naruto thought and chucked the baby out only to see the light of it exploding.Before shutting off the portal and sighing in relif.Knowing that the village was once again safe from disaster.Sakura quickly thanked Naruto and sent him on his way to allow herself and the medic-nin to repair and tidy the laboratry up again.

    Present day
    Being knocked to the ground was unearthing for Blaise nearly immedietly he tried to get up but his body simply would not respond to his eager attempts to move.Starting to panick he started to breath more.Unconsiously allowing his newly present chakra to circulate around his body.Thinning out but making a core for any more chakra to live within.Trying once more he managed to raise his upper body to an extant where he could sit on the seat.Holding a worried expression on his face he asked in-between his heavy breathing
    "What was that?"
    Only for the reply of a stuttered speech coming from Cassidy
    "I...I dont know"
    All of the people shocked heard a familiar bing bing signalling for them to go to house group.And so the one big group that by the time the bell went consisted of 13 people split up into a group of 6 and 7 both groups heading to their represpective house groups.Shocked but curious about the events.
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    So what do you guys think?
    Yes the title of it could be better but meh.As for the part concerning Naruto and the Konoha time it was simply for backstory sake.Now some info about characters
    Name:Blaise
    Age: 15
    Gender: Male
    Backround: Blaise is more of a srious unemotionall type.But cares for others.Hurt those that he cares for and you have something to worry about he has a particular dislike for bullying having been on the recieving end during his early life.

    Name: Cassidy
    Age: 15
    Gender: Female
    Backround: She is your everday talkitive girl.Very emotionall and frightening when she is mad.

    Name: Damien
    Age: 15
    Gender: Male
    Backround: Has anger issue's was bullied during early life reason that Blaise and he get along so well although it mightnt seem like it at times.

    Not giving to much brackround info out.Please tell me what i need to improve on.Was written on tablet so yeh no auto correct for me sadly
     
         

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    Re: The Ninja Way Reborn

    Really liked it...
     
         

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    Re: The Ninja Way Reborn

    Very nice and axel ftw
     
         

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    Re: The Ninja Way Reborn

    Story was brilliant! But it felt like you rushed it. Reading this tells me that you can be a great writer.
     
         

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    Re: The Ninja Way Reborn

    Sick story line but exploding babies
     
         

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    Re: The Ninja Way Reborn

    i like it... thanks... ***** 4 u...
     
         

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    Re: The Ninja Way Reborn

    That was pretty cool ^.^
     
         

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