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    Kishi Uzumaki Lonely Wind's Avatar
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    When my dream comes true

    Today , i went to the place , we used to meet
    the place , you left me , where i saw you for last time
    the place , where memories got buried in past
    it seems things have changed a lot since that day ,
    like you did , but i remember like yesterday
    waiting there for you to appear from far corner
    searching your beautiful face , among the faces
    that appears and disappears , seconds used to feel hours

    i remember the happiness , i used to feel , just seeing you
    sometimes i used to hide in other side so you couldn't see me
    watching you search for me , and that sadness in you
    in your eyes , i waits there laughing at you girl
    till tears begin to appear in your eye
    although i knew i gonna get scolded later
    i used to do that , once in a awhile
    i always thought i would be able to do that forever

    but reality wasn't naive as i used to be those days
    one day you said , there's nothing between us
    i asked you , what happened to our dreams
    a cold voice said , it's a my dream not yours
    since that day , i climbed the mountains for my dream
    now i have come to the top , now i see things
    that i never used saw before , never understood
    now it's an easy walk down the hill

    but there's a fear i must face on my own
    maybe it's a wish not to remember you
    when my dream comes true
    because there gonna be a regret in me
    how life could have been if you are with me
     
         
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    Over The 9 Mountains and
    Across The 8 Seas There Is
    Nothing I Cannot Cut!!
     



    Re: When my dream comes true

    good poem keep it up mate
     
         

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    Re: When my dream comes true

    Nice work! Very touching. It could double for song lyrics as well
     
         

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    Re: When my dream comes true

    Quote Originally Posted by Chibakuu Tensei View Post
    good poem keep it up mate
    Thanks man , i will

    Quote Originally Posted by thepizzaguy View Post
    Nice work! Very touching. It could double for song lyrics as well
    Thanks , songs lyrics ? i don't know that much about them .
     
         

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