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    Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    With no heartbeat They're No longer Jinchuuriki Or Uchiha


    First Page
    Scene Starts With Naruto and Sasuke's heart's stop beating and they enter a deep consciousness

    Naruto:......Kurama......I died(In tears)I'm sorry that I couldn't-
    ?: Crying already Scaredy Cat
    Naruto: !!!!!
    Sasuke: Scared without your beast you can't save everyone
    Naruto: No I'm sorry I couldn't save you
    Sasuke: (Shocked Expression....Then Anger)


    Second Page
    Sasuke: Screw you I never needed you why are you so obsessed with me
    Naruto: Because I'm your Friend......Your Sasuke Uchiha a Shinobi of the Leaf Village my comade
    Sasuke: I WANTED TO BURN YOU AND ITACHI'S PRECIOUS LEAF VILLAGE DOWN even after knowing that You still Pursue me Why I don't owe you anything
    Naruto: (Laugh's through tears of Death) Since I first seen you I knew that you were lonely just like me and I just wanted to be friends

    Third Page
    Sasuke: Go be friends with the other dead Ninja then
    Naruto: Remember when I told you I would take in all your hatred away
    Sasuke: Remember when I told you that you would die first along with your beast
    Naruto: Yeah but were both dead now Sasuke you have no reason to be angry
    Naruto/Sasuke: Your no longer a Uchiha/Jinchuuriki

    Fourth Page

    Sasuke: My Brother always left me so (in tears) even as an Uchiha I was still alone.
    Naruto: !!!Sasuke did you know that our mothers were best friends
    Sasuke: No what does that matter NARUTO they are dead!!! WE ARE DEAD!!!
    Naruto: So that makes us GOD BROTHERS Sasuke, we are no longer what used to make us lonely
    Sasuke: (Laugh's) I see.....So even in Death I can't get away from you
    Naruto: Nope (Laugh together) We're brothers its our Fates/Destiny

    Fifth Page
    Meanwhile: Hinata gets up and races to Naruto's Location
    Gaara: SAKURA what are you doing Bring Naruto back we have to follow Kurama's plan!!!(Hinata arrives out of breath in tears)
    Sakura: Hinata I'm so Sorry(cries in shame) I just can't......NARUTO!!! PLEASE WAKE UP COME BACK TO US
    Gaara: (in disbelief) Shit No Sakura you have to try some other way.... DON'T GIVE UP
    Hinata: (in raged) Sakura-chan don't give up on Naruto he didn't give up on any of us
    Gaara/Sakura: (remembering)

    Sixth Page
    Gaara: Flash backs When he came back to life when Naruto and when Lady Chiyo saved him

    Seventh Page
    Sakura: Flash backs when Naruto saved her for Gaara

    Eighth Page
    Hinata: Flash backs when Naruto encouraged her while fighting Neji

    Ninth Page

    Hinata: I will never give up(looks at Naruto)
    Sakura: They're nothing we can d- !!!
    Hianta: GENTLE FIST(on Naruto's chest and release blocked chakra in his heart then his heart regains rhythm)Believe it Thats My Ninja Way!!!
    Sakura: (shocked) It worked (thinking of Hinata's confidence and then starts to mold her chakra) I'll finish healing him
    Gaara: Hurry we need to get started on Kurama's plan
    Hinata: What would that be Gaara-sama?
    Gaara: (In deep thought) We must connect Naruto with-

    Tenth Page
    Scene is of Orochimaru's squad

    Karinhysterical) I don't won't Sasuke-kun to die
    Juugo: Lead the Way
    Suigetsu: (panicing) Orochimaru what should we do
    Orochimaru: Time is of the essence but we must be patient Sasuke can wait Karin can still bring him back if-
    Karin: NO!! He is dying there's no time to wait (rushes off but then falls in Shock)

    Eleventh Page
    ?: Did you just poop? Let me see
    Orochimaru/Suigetsu: You fool!!!
    Spiral Zetsu: I asked did you just poop (prepare's to attacks Karin)
    karin: (Afraid) No I didn't shit!! (Gets up and try's to run but is paused by missed attack)
    Spiral Zetsu: Then what is wet and sliding down your leg running on the ground (Shocked by a punch to the face)
    Juugo: (Says with Badass Murder face) Pee!!!!! B!tch

    Twelfth Page

    Spiral Zetsu: (Shocked that he was hit but was barely fazed by Juugo while attached to the buddha)I see pee all the time(demon shadow faced) Show me your poop (Intimidating voice) I already know your going to pee(to Juugo)
    Juugo: I'm not pissy like Suigetsu
    Suigetsu: HEY I'M not PISSY
    Karin: (Runs)
    Orochimaru: Juugo take Karin to Sasuke

    Thirteenth Page

    Juugo: Right (fully embrace Nature Chakra) AAAHAAAAHHAHA (explodes fly's to the ground picks up Karin and fly's in Sasuke's direction)
    Spiral Zetsu: (Looking at Suigetsu) Can Water-Boy Poop?
    Orochimaru: Suigetsu distract him
    Suigetsu: (Melancholy) I knew I was going to DIE TODAY (turns into full water demon and distracts Zetsu)

    Fourteenth Page

    Orochimaru: Now I must wait for-
    ?: Oh and What would that be Orochimaru?
    Orochimaru: (laughs comically) you know me so well, but would you, a dead man, try to stop me........would you SENSEI!!!!!?
    Hiruzen: OROCHIMARU WE DON'T HAVE TIME FOR THIS
    Orochimaru: The God of all Ninja Has been Defeated so maybe Its time for another

    Fifthteenth Page

    Hiruzen: Orochimaru(looks down in Shame) Where did we go wrong?
    Orochimaru: (Tsunade approches) I went wrong When I let Nawaki die
    Tsunade: Orochimaru..........(Sadness covers them)
    Hiruzen: Well you can't let this apprentice die!!
    Orochimaru/Tsunade: (Shocked pause, Orochimaru looks up sinister then smile spread's on his face)(Hiruzen notice's and is filled with more shame) Your right Sensei
    Meanwhile: Juugo and Karin race to Sasuke body

    Sixteenth Page

    Juugo: Karin can you bring him back
    Karin: Yes He didn't go to far his heart just stopped
    Juugo: Restart it now hurry
    Karin: Uzumaki Art:Cell Regeneration Pulse Justsu

    Seventh Page
    Within the Depths of Sasuke's and Naruto's Consciousness

    Naruto: We are the Suns of the Leaf so we can't burn it (Smiles)We-
    Sasuke: (laughs) yeah I know......We give it Light
    Naruto/Sasuke: (shocked) We're fading!!!
    Naruto: What does this mean?(Scared but remaining optimistic)
    Sasuke: It means I go back to being a Uchiha and you go back to being a Jinchuuriki
    Naruto: (Saddens) But Madara took Kurama
    Sasuke: (Smile widens) Hump! well were going to get him back from that dead bastard
    Naruto: Wow I'm not used to having a little brother(Smile's)
    Sasuke: (Smilies then catches on) Hey I'm the big brother because I'm older so COME HERE NARUTO!!

    Eighteenth Page

    Naruto: (Runs over to Sasuke and Gets poked in the head) Hey (Smile and frowns at the same time) Big brother my azz
    Naruto/Sasuke: (returns to the world to be hugged my crying women) We can't die!! We're not Hokage yet!!
    Hinata/Sakura: NARUTO!!!!
    Gaara: Naruto lets go (Gaara's squad fly's off) Do you remember Kurama's plan
    Naruto: (Still weak from the extraction) yeah (Sakura start's healing him without words)

    Nineteenth Page
    Karin: SASUKE!!!
    Sasuke: I'm still not 100% but we have to go!
    Karin: Let me heal you first
    Naruto and Sasuke return to the World with Smiles on their faces and Greater Bond than Ever preparing for the Next Moment

    Twentieth Page

    ?: You knew Madara was alive back then didn't you......OROCHIMARU!!!!
    Tsunade: (Shocked) SENSEI
    Orochimaru: EDO TENSEI RELEASE
    Hiruzen: Why Orochimaru?
    Orochimaru: Because he will help make ME A GOD (As he looks up to see the GOD TREE BLOOM) (Licks his lips) ITS MY FATE

    Hey Everybody This was my very first Prediction Please Give me a Negative rep or Positive if you like it with your comments and critiques thanks
     
         
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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    Do you really want me to neg rep you if I didn't like it?
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    Quote Originally Posted by AlphaE20 View Post
    Do you really want me to neg rep you if I didn't like it?
    Yep I also need your critique
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by Son Ryuto Uzumaki View Post
    Yep I also need your critique
    1. Ok, the Piss and poop thing had me reeling, but it dragged on for a little long.
    2. I remember the gentle palm thing, but it won't save Naruto
    3. Healing doesn't work so whatever means is utilized has to be supernatural
    4. Orochimaru actually betting on Hiruzen's help seems a little unlikely. Are you a Hiruzen fan??? Orochimaru is preparing a sneek attack from the looks of it.
    5. The best part was the Naruto/ Sasuke dialog twas gold dude

    Though I get the reason why, a growing problem in predictions is that they seem to force development too soon and add in too much. Slow it down be patient and try to make the prediction as close to a real chapter as possible.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    Quote Originally Posted by AlphaE20 View Post
    1. Ok, the Piss and poop thing had me reeling, but it dragged on for a little long.
    2. I remember the gentle palm thing, but it won't save Naruto
    3. Healing doesn't work so whatever means is utilized has to be supernatural
    4. Orochimaru actually betting on Hiruzen's help seems a little unlikely. Are you a Hiruzen fan??? Orochimaru is preparing a sneek attack from the looks of it.
    5. The best part was the Naruto/ Sasuke dialog twas gold dude

    Though I get the reason why, a growing problem in predictions is that they seem to force development too soon and add in too much. Slow it down be patient and try to make the prediction as close to a real chapter as possible.
    Good looking but Naw all Oro has to do is release the EDO, I was explaining how Since Madara beat Hashirama already Oro didn't have to worry about a struggle from the other edo's when he sends them back so I was also hinting that Minato was leaving the battle field as well
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    Quote Originally Posted by Son Ryuto Uzumaki View Post
    Good looking but Naw all Oro has to do is release the EDO, I was explaining how Since Madara beat Hashirama already Oro didn't have to worry about a struggle from the other edo's when he sends them back so I was also hinting that Minato was leaving the battle field as well
    Ok, I must have misread. U really think Oro will betray everybody. That could work, but I thought he'd just die somehow. Maybe join Jaraiya
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by AlphaE20 View Post
    Ok, I must have misread. U really think Oro will betray everybody. That could work, but I thought he'd just die somehow. Maybe join Jaraiya
    Yeah I called it Fates beyond Death for a couple reasons 1. being Naruto is really sasuke's god brother 2. Even beyond death they were linked and 3. Orochimaru follow his destiny from beyond the grave considering how many times he was killed and how much he eludes death the god tree must really be his end goal
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by Son Ryuto Uzumaki View Post
    Yeah I called it Fates beyond Death for a couple reasons 1. being Naruto is really sasuke's god brother 2. Even beyond death they were linked and 3. Orochimaru follow his destiny from beyond the grave considering how many times he was killed and how much he eludes death the god tree must really be his end goal
    Hmph... Not bad
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    I liked it but that spiral part was unnecessary :/

    Also if you made Sasuke act less happy and more saddy happy like then I'd like it even more.
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by MinatoTheYellowFlash View Post
    I liked it but that spiral part was unnecessary :/

    Also if you made Sasuke act less happy and more saddy happy like then I'd like it even more.
    Yeah it was my bad i didnt think i had to imply that considering we all know his persononality yes his is more so sad happy but also accepting new things will come
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    great predication i like it but i didnt like orochimaru part i mean last part
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    I like the ending, that sneaky snake Oro
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    Decent Prediction.
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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    Not Awesome but more then good.. Try Harder... +15 p
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    The Naruto and Sasuke interaction was hilarious but a bit unlikely.
    The spiral Zetsu part was a bit dragged out , and you have some grammar mistakes too but since its your first prediction i won't take it into consideration.

    Overall its a great prediction and i can really see it happening , +rep.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    It was great and pretty funny. My only critique is this: Naruto and Sasuke were too mushy. They are not God brothers. Jiraiya was Naruto's Godfather and Sasuke is not Jiraiya's kid. A God sibling is the child of a God parent. A God parent is one who is supposed to take care of the child in case something happens to the real parents.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    So that was your very first prediction huh? Well I must say it was outstanding. It had a lot of things going on, personalities were perfectly fitting, I liked orochimaru's part and most importantly the dialogue between Naruto and Sasuke, although that the thing with the poking was a little far-fetched. In any case, you have a bright future in writting predictions, that I can tell with certainty.
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by chaos control View Post
    It was great and pretty funny. My only critique is this: Naruto and Sasuke were too mushy. They are not God brothers. Jiraiya was Naruto's Godfather and Sasuke is not Jiraiya's kid. A God sibling is the child of a God parent. A God parent is one who is supposed to take care of the child in case something happens to the real parents.
    They are god brothers Mikoto didn't know that Naruto was Kushina son considering Hiruzen concealed his identity
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    Quote Originally Posted by Son Ryuto Uzumaki View Post
    They are god brothers Mikoto didn't know that Naruto was Kushina son considering Hiruzen concealed his identity
    She obviously did , Naruto was given his Mother's surname and the Kyuubi , but the village wouldn't have let her take care of him because the issue between them and the Uchihas.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    nice job !

    considering this is your first time
    I'm sure you can do better than this...
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ahmed1993 View Post
    She obviously did , Naruto was given his Mother's surname and the Kyuubi , but the village wouldn't have let her take care of him because the issue between them and the Uchihas.
    But they still are God brothers by the will of their parents but you know this, I feel thats why they are so connected
     
         

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    nice job !

    considering this is your first time
    I'm sure you can do better than this...
    Thanks bro I will Write another next week after the legit manga
     
         

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    Nicely done and I liked Orochimarus reason
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    I wonder what a Perplexed Shinobi Thinks
     
         

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    Re: Naruto Manga 663: Fates Beyond Death

    Great Prediction.
     
         

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